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>>7467691
>How do we become great /lit/?

Stop going on 4chan

>>7467704
I don't believe this though. There must be a way
>>7467713
So you're saying do not allow yourself to be distracted at all costs?

>>7467691
>We are what we repeatedly do. Excellence, then, is not an act, but a habit
~Aristotle

>>7466047
It varies, but here is what my writing normally focuses on:
>alienation
>the nature of art
>absurdity

>monads
>bimbos
>megahertz

>pride
>Huysmans
>distance

Hating jews doesn't make C-line a fascist

>>7464850
He openly praised fascism

>"Who is the true friend of the people? Fascism is. Who has done the most for the working man? The USSR or Hitler? Hitler has... Who has done the most for the small businessman? Not Thorez but Hitler!"

>>7464748
It's the patricians political stance.

>>7456816
working on it now, it might take me a moment

>>7456816
First thing: it's 2015, not 1975, turn off the MS Word auto-capitalize at the beginning of each line. It makes for easier reading.

There's a fair bit going on here. My main criticism is that it's way too wordy. L1-4: do we need to know about the "nameless third?" I don't think so. Just close the blinds, everyone understands the significance of closing the blinds. Now, there's some weird conflation going on here. It's night, but you're having sex. Each of those things implicitly weakens the curtain gesture, because now it has two reasons for being performed instead of one.

Hardly anyone ever describes sex with panache, and I feel your description lacks charm. It's very physical: "slide," "teeth, "tongue," "meeting" (and this whole ships business is sort of a cliche--two ships passing in the night). In a novel, a character has to open a door to make things happen. You can't jump forward in time. But in poetry, you can. Yet I feel that your sexual description is doing this, opening a door. It's performative and unnecessary. "Our bodies surge," for example, is so pedestrian, such an erotica kind of line. I think you can do without all of that.

Moonlight and blessing make for a good pair. The pair is weakened by "hazy," an unnecessary adjective, and "blows," a poor verb for describing light.

The "Portholes" sentence is doing the same kind of sexual description, "glide gently," "rounds and curves," "coverage and comfort." Sticks and stones is a cliche or at any rate a banality.

There's a huge run-on sentence that begins at "Pausing for breath" and ends at "air around us." It shouldn't be that long. At one point your clause break is confusing because it's so short and easy to miss--"in the might-have-been past AND frozen things melt." Chop this sentence into manageable pieces. Then toss out all the pieces that are not necessary to the poem. "Energy" is a worthless abstraction. Don't be cute: don't say something like "maintain your smile" or "few places we'd rather be than in bed" or "melt in our warm open bellies."

It's a good ending but it's marred by the usual pitfalls. "Abstract previews" is literally a double abstraction. Abstractions are bad, delete this. The sentence goes on with too many clauses and we can't hold onto the whole thing until the end. The final clause should be its own sentence. It's a good ending.

Have you heard of stanzas? They would help the piece, in my opinion.

>>7472047

>a sci-fi book about mechs

that tells me literally nothing about the book

to get people to read something you have to prove it's interesting or at least stands out in some way from 99% of people have already made

>>7472047
Sure, why not.

>>7472047
>>7472055
Alright, the year is 2130. In the turn of the century robotic scientists have perfected the manufacturing and use of bipedial robotic vehicles. About 30 years later an alien race of warriors have contacted earth in hopes of claiming the solar system as part of their empire, earth refuses and all countries have temporarily joined together to defeat the common enemy. The race of aliens have requested that earth follow a war protocol of their people that dictates that no fighting be carried out on the respective home planets and all battles to be fought on a life less planet; the scene is set for the battle of Mars.

you sure you don't want to save this thread for a friday night?

>>7472011
Why? Everyone here are NEETs anyways. Everyday is the weekend.

>>7472028
Just thought it might be nice to have something saved for a /lit/ special occasion for once.

>>7471885
No, anon: you've ruined yourself.

>Microsoft subscription expired on October ninth.
>set my clock back, was still able to use it
>many websites became unusable because certain certificates couldn't be accessed because I'd changed the clock
>couldn't post on 4chan
>couldn't access google or youtube
>most productive I've been in a while
>pumping out good shit
>get microsoft 2016
>Post constantly
>wasting Christmas break
I'm considering posting porno to get a ban, but idk yet.

>>7471885
no that's just your personality and lack of discipline. in the 1920s you'd still be distracted, just by something else.

Free food is all around you, just hang around a restaurant with an outdoor patio or something and then when they leave, just eat all of their remaining food
Easy enough

>>7471866
I would choose to eat. I can't imagine finding a book that I couldn't find in a cheaper edition that would seriously make me consider starving myself.

>>7471866
Depends which book...and what kind of food.

For a post on a board about reading you should post a picture that people can actually read.

Why don't you flip the fucking thing around and take a clear picture first.

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>>7471857
>>7471841

>>7471712
Stirner just to see his face (and then elbow him just for it is the price).

>>7471712
marx, so i can kick his ass and post the video on worldstar

>>7471646
If the people that made it went to "art school", its not art.

>>7471655
why though? you need the necessary context (social capital, influence, network, exposure) for it to be art rather than ugly painting; art school is a necessary credential

Looks like the dreams I used to have while I was on chemo

Don't read Ada; you might kill yourself.

“What I heard was but the melody of children at play, nothing but that, and so limpid was the air that within this vapor of blended voices, majestic and minute, remote and magically near, frank and divinely enigmatic—one could hear now and then, as if released, an almost articulate spurt of vivid laughter, or the crack of a bat, or the clatter of a toy wagon, but it was all really too far for the eye to distinguish any movement in the lightly etched streets. I stood listening to that musical vibration from my lofty slope, to those flashes of separate cries with a kind of demure murmur for background, and then I knew that the hopelessly poignant thing was not Lolita’s absence from my side, but the absence of her voice from that concord.”

>>7471572
She hated him

>>7471214
claiming Dusty before anyone else

Houellebecq

>>7471165
>uses trump jpg
>doesn't borrow winner/loser dichotomy

what a loser

Pleb: James Joyce
Patrician: J.D. Salinger

>>7471165
>Patrician: Elton John
>Pleb: OP

>>7470334
Who are you quoting?

What would he think of Tundra?

This thread made me laugh. Thanks, dear anon.