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A man finds himself in a room, he wasn’t here before but he is now. He doesn’t know why he’s now. He isn’t thinking about much at all, he doesn’t know language or the concept, he has never worn shoes or lain in bed. He can scarcely be called a human in mind or manner by our standards but, he undoubtedly is. Even with his lack of any experiences or stimuli the gears and cogs are moving slowly, like any machine; Metal bending warming and expanding, oil slowly dripping, lubricating like molasses in a confectionery or as alcohol does with one's modesty.
Colors appeared then shapes then hues, from the shapes came patterns followed by figures. A box, plate, stick, button, tree, and leaf. The figures taunted him for some reason or another but none in particular. An understanding being with experiences in which the relate current situations to could not grasp the magnitude of such an unfettered mind’s anger. The unfettered mind is left to cling to anything and it chose madness and fury. His veins popped, quarks and leptons hissing and crackling with the power of a being that knows no limitations.

He fell back to concoct new worlds,
Fell out in throbbing swirls,
He fell ‘till the world stopped,
Fell off this world.

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>>7736565

I am going to post a post a pastebin of my most recent short story. I feel like I am getting better with each one I complete but for some reason they always seem to end around the 2000 word mark, I can't figure out how to say more or how to convey an emotion/feeling in more than one sentence when I feel like I've already gotten the message across.

I'm going to stick around in this thread and critique most of what gets posted so I would really appreciate a comprehensive critique if anyone has the time.

http://pastebin.com/z0TabAT9

>>7736565

I will pick out a few sentences/phrases which may have been written intentionally in the way that they have been but to me they feel out of place with the rest of the tone set by your writing.

>He isn’t thinking about much at all, he doesn’t know language or the concept.

He's not thinking, he has no language and no understanding of the concept

>He can scarcely be called a human in mind or manner by our standards

He can scarcely be called human by any standard

The reason I mention these two is because they seem very conversational compared to the rest of the text that follows which is an objective, academic sort of description and it doesn't start it off on a good note IMO.

In the first paragraph you're writing in present tense and then you shift to past tense.

>The figures taunted him for some reason or another but none in particular
>for some reason or another but none in particular

Feels like an unnecessary addition, doesn't really add much. Personifies the shapes and patterns for only one second and there's no purpose in doing so.

>An understanding being with experiences in which the relate current situations to could not grasp the magnitude of such an unfettered mind’s anger.

I might be stupid but this made 0 sense to me, try reading this and pretend you didn't write it and are only seeing it for the first time.

I would say that as a whole whatever message/purpose there is to this piece, it has failed to deliver. I'm unsure of what I'm reading and the lack of careful constriction in the actual text indicates that I'm not just missing it, it's just not there.

>>7736572
>>7737136

No, stop asking stupid shit. How would you know what to write and how without having someone with tons of experience in that field teach you at college? The only author who didn't have a degree in literature was Homer, but he didn't even exist

That tan line. My rock gets cock hard every time.

>>7757889
Nobody will read you. Do it for yourself in your spare time, if you enjoy it, isn't that all that matters?

If you suck the right cocks...

Use sci-hub.io

So for example, if you want to open

http://www.jstor.org/stable/2872097

you add .sci-hub.io after the .org

http://www.jstor.org.sci-hub.io/stable/2872097

>>7753398
O____________O

I literally can't express how much better my life has been since I attended Oxford. I went to a state school and gradually became the stereotypical moody, withdrawn sensitive type who both despises the quality of his immediate culture and feels a weird pride for having been raised in a sort of anti-intellectual and brutal environment. I was all set to take my Russell Group humanities BA and spend my life working as an anonymous, insecure wageslave forever thankful of being offered a job and forever too insecure to pursue my creative ambitions. The chip on my shoulder had become something of a wedge, and I felt too out of place regardless of my environment, too resentful and bitter to even attempt to make it in the artistic world. Then I finally applied for Oxford and got in to study an English MA, with reassurance that should I work hard enough a career in academia or within one of Oxford's affiliated companies would be almost guaranteed. I turned up as apprehensive as usual, and the first few days were spent regretting my decision and desperately feigning a cultured personality. But then I realized that the people there were just interesting and that the snobbery and exclusivity I had anticipated was just a myth borne out of my working class upbringing. I've since graduated, having spend the year dining in grand halls with groups of interesting people, dating several girls (one of whom, a petite Russian whose family traces back to the aristocracy, is now my fiancee). I work four days a week at a publishing company and earn £38k a year. I regularly meet up with friends from my college and visit Oxford for nights out and for meetings with my professors. The Martin Eden-esque novel I have been writing for two years has been selected for publication at a major British publishing house and, honestly, I could not have imagined a few years ago how great life could be. I come on /lit/ and see how pathetic you all are and just shake my head and chuckle. If I saw you guys on the street I would of course throw you a penny or discuss Bukowski or whatever "realist" writers you enjoy, but ultimately I would be able to tell within ten seconds if you're an Oxbridge grad and would dismiss you as a potential source of good company if you are not. I never thought I'd know what it was like to be objectively better than somebody else, for the value of my existence to be superior to the value of a stranger's, but now I do and I've never been happier. People are awed by power and prestige. All I need to do is mention the university I attended (if only for a year) and they immediately begin to hunch and look at their feet because they know they are in the presence of greatness.

>>7757078
looks like she's shoving her finger into her urethra.

>>7757095
>looks like

>>7748168
Semen demon? Source?

stoya over acts so much
its fucking irritating

>>7748175
I'd rather have over acting than a fucking flat banal anal session.

>>7757306
No. Scaruffi is one of the biggest hacks of our age.

>>7757321
Elaborate, please.

>>7757306
He should stick to music

>>7748424
Dream of a Ridiculous Man

>>7748424
El sur, Borges

Chronicle of a Death Foretold

>>7756039
Also a lot them are faking it, or had to learn English, because their country (incl Europoorans) sucks.
Don't worry about learning another language. It's one thing to be a stupid obnoxious tourist, another to be educated and not complacent about being monolingual.

I can only read in three. Been working on chinese and latin for a long time, not much success.
>>7756056
monoglot pleb detected

>>7756039
German from high school, native english

>wordsworoth joyce
>spanish memes
>fedora-tier penguins

don't bother with the other 4 OP you already lost. should probably just delete your thread now desu this is pretty embarrassing

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>>7746448
2/3

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>>7750658
St. John's College is a private liberal arts college known for its distinctive curriculum centered on reading and discussing the Great Books of Western Civilization.

Go to a state school on the cheap, do an honors curriculum, get letters from distinguished professors, do your MA/MFA at someplace funded

hello is this where I order my caramel latte with extra foam?

>>7750658
the internet is the only way you can learn about the humanities without getting assaulted by cultural marxism. University is just a plot to get you indebted and indoctrinated

>>7747993
Picaresques. So fucking comfy.

Anything by Faulkner.
Any Greek or Roman epic.
Also Beowulf, reading about the cold and cruel world in a heated home with a warm cup of coffee is very comfy.

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>>7748001

it's better dude lol

hahahahahahaha

Please stop until you get better at your shitposting. This is amateur stuff.

Women are deranged.

>>7751736
Cause they wanna get fucked

>>7751739
Well the author is male, let's not forget.

>>7750747
What's it about?

>>7750751
It's about 33,000 words.

>>7750751
It's a historical novel set in Dark Ages Britain about the Saxon invasion.

Bloom's

>>7753485
i'll get this out of the way.
>translations

You don't need a translation
You should perform a seance and talk to Plato himself and ask him what did he mean by writing the Republic