Is anyone here a writer? I need a proffessional view on my writing.

Hi, I am an professional human being who is interested in reading your thing.

>>323646
OK, you can contact me on reddit if you want and I'll give you details then

https://www.reddit.com/user/JustKerryBerry/

>>323648
i honestly hate reading and your shit is not worth my time, could you fuck off? I am not interested in your shit.

>>323650
What? Why did you even comment then?? Also I didnt even send you my writing yet though

>>323653
It's probably shit.

>>323656
Why did you bother commenting -_-
Fuck you, your like the opposite of helpful

>>323658
Why are you insulting me, I was trying to help you with your writing!

>>323661
You havent even seen it

>>323664
FUCK YOU STUPID CUNT NIGGER BITCH NO ONE CARES ABOUT YOUR SUPID NIGGER ASS BITCH ASS CUNT ASS SILLY ASS NUT ASS STUPID ASS SHITTY ASS WRITING THAT MOTHERFUCKING ASS SUCKS GET A FUCKING JOB CUNT FUCK YOU NIGGER KILL YOURSELF DELETE YOU SHITTY WRITING FUCK I WILL HACK YOUR REDDIT FUCK YOU FUCK YOU FUCK YOU I WILL FUCK YOU ON YOUR FOREHEAD UNTIL YOU HAVE A HOLE IN YOUR BRAIN AND I WILL MAKE YOU DRINK ACID A GIVE YOU A VIAGRA SO WHEN YOU CUM UR PENIS MELTS AND I WILL MAKE YOU DRINK MOTHERFUCKING ASS ALCOHOL AND MAKE YOU HEAT A BURNING TORCH SO YOUR ORGANS WILL BURN THEN I WILL MAKE YOU DRINK WATER SO WHEN IT MIXES WITH THE BURNING ALCOHOL IT WILL BLOW YOUR MOTHERFUCKING ASS UP CUNT KYS!

>>323670
...I'm a girl

>>323672
THEN WHAT THE FUCKING FUCK ARE YOU DOING ON THE MOTHERFUCKING INTERNET DUMB BITCH KYS.

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OK does anyone on this board have a serious reply?

>>323675 Hello, I would love to! How do I start?

>>323678
https://www.reddit.com/user/JustKerryBerry/

You can contact me here and I'll send you my writing!
If you dont have a reddit account, I can just link it here though

>>323639
In all honesty, you should ask reddit for help.

>>323690
No, they're generally unhelpful

>>323695
HAHA CUNT ITS SILL ME KYS BITCH CUNT CUNT NIGGER

>>323695
>Reddit
>unhelpful

>>323648
i know sometimes people here make the mistake of asking others to come to them for help instead of the other way around (post the stuff here and ask for feedback on it publicly), but
>coming from reddit ask 4channers to go back to it for help
wtf?!?
and redditors still wonder why they are hatted around here...

>>323707
its just that 4chan usually replies faster than reddit

So, is anyone gonna read my transformers yaoi tentacle fanfic???

>>323709
on >>>/b/ perhaps, >>>/wsr/ is generally a slow board (sometimes very slow)
if you want help/feedback on something post it here, asking people to come to you wont work (i find it to be somewhat narcissistic even [and i like to think im kind of a nice person], you are the one needing help, why should others come to you instead of the other way around?)
or you can ask redditors for help on their website

>>323712
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>>323713
Ok, I'm sorry I didnt realize I was being rude is all.


https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12499938/2/Kara-Suman-Hamilton-s-Insane-Journey-to-Save-Alexander


This is the chapter I wanted critique on, if anyone wants to check it out

>>323719

Okay, I'm gonna be a honest nice fella right here and tell you straight up in 4 points what I think.

1. It's a goddamn hamilton fanfiction with your own crudely drawn OC. It's fucking cringeworthy. Of course it's gonna be cringeworthy, but in essence that is not a bad thing. If you take this writing thing seriously and keep writing stories or whatever, you'll (hopefully) look back in 2 years and want to tear your guts out because you wrote that fanfic. It's terrible and cringy.

2. Your writing sucks. First off, don't hit enter everytime you end a sentence. It makes your story look like a transcript from a dialogue. Second, if you feel like you need to give the viewer the impression that Mulligan is screaming, try to solve that by actually putting some thought into your writing instead of hitting capslock. Same goes for the baguette accent of Lafayette. Go read some books - real, good books - no gay shit off of the internet and no fanfics. Straight up classic literature so you learn how to form a coherent paragraph.

3. By posting your reddit account you practically doxxed yourself on 4chan. On /wsr/ nobody gives a shit, but on /b/ you'll encounter the most massive fucking idiots the internet has to offer. Next time put your story in a pastebin.


Delete this thread, delete your reddit account, go visit a library and rethink if you want to write cringy fanfictions or stories that are actually worth reading.

>>323731
>4 points

>makes 3 points and a closing statement

nigga you fucking stupid as shit

>>323731
Do you have any positive notes? Also that's not my main reddit account

>>323743
Okay, to prove it to you... I spent 2 minutes looking through your reddit account and found your current city, your birthplace, your full name and your age. That enough?

No, there is nothing positive about this.
It's horrible. It's so bad, it sounds like a parody of a typical fanfiction.

>>323747
Ok but you could at least say something nice

Also I'm pretty sure the average person doesnt go through peoples internet posting histories to find that kind of stuff out but thank you for your time anyway

>>323756
4chan isn't the average person.

>>323719
>the chapter I wanted critique on
i find it kinda shallow, compared to the other one (not nearly as exciting, little development in the story). also, too much sass on the main character and not enough on the others.
but then again im not really into this kind of stuff (fanfiction) so maybe someone who is more knowledgeable in this can chime in. as said before this is a rather slow board so check back in a couple of hours, maybe bump the thread tomorrow if no one replies
gl

>>323747
>found your current city, your birthplace, your full name and your age
its not that hard to do this when all the info is easily and publicly available. still this is only an issue if any of that info should be private, should it? if not dont worry
>>323756
>the average person doesnt go through peoples internet posting histories to find that kind of stuff
no, the average person doesnt tell you they have done it

also, 4chan is an 18+ website
>>>/rules/global2
:^)

>tfw sometimes anons can be more truthful than a good """friend"""

>>323764
I'm acutally 25 and go to yale, i just like writing about teenager stuff

>>323761
Thank yo for your honest feedback