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Last time I made a new thread I picked a cool cyoa and people called it bad so this is my protest.
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>>52931329
Everyone knows the Narrator is always the best girl. Therefore: Ane, I choose you!
(Also the /ss/ doesn't hurt...)
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This has anime and being evil god, so it's perfect cyoa.
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>>52931536

You want to be uploaded?
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>>52931714
Sure.
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>>52931714
There's the you that loses the coin flip but there's also the you that wins it.
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>>52931714
Yeah.
And then I'll come back a year later to make another me. And a year after that for another. And another. And another.
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>>52931625
Is there a continuation?
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>>52931890
No, it's a WIP. If the author didn't drop it entirely, that is.
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>>52931714
If by "uploaded" you mean "transferred" and not that POS.

Coinflip brain uploading is like if someone tried to market death as a painkiller.
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>>52931890
The wip got more popular than I expected so now I'm dealing with crippling insecurity. If the full cyoa doesn't measure up I'll feel like I let everyone down and kill myself. Progress is slow. Other cyoas are being made in the meantime to grind my author skills.
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>>52931910
Pity, I like it. Are there any similar CYOAs? I know about the Dark Lord, Domain Master, Necromancer, Dark God and Archdemon.
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>>52931939
It's a lot better actually. I mean, after you do it you'll be there laughing your ass of at the poor other version of you that got stuck behind.
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>>52931940
It is good, my kind of good. Even if it 'doesn't measure', you can just edit it after hearing what other people have to say
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>>52931940
People will always find something to complain about. Just don't abandon it.
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In honor of last thread
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>>52931940
Never give up upload it when it is ready
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>>52931625
Oh, and I'll go with DEATH. DARKNESS is a nice option too, but having billions of summonable at will undead is awesome. Being the Alpha Monster is cool too though
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>>52931625
I choose DARKNESS
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Here's the deal. The world in my cyoa is split into 4 continents. You're going to be in charge of one of them.

Should each continent come with its own native people OR should the people be their own seperate choice.

In the first option there'd be less options but a more established world. You want to rule the Islands of the East? Fine. But you can't have have dragons and their queen in your lands then because they live in the Northern mountains.

In the second option there'd be more options but a less established world. You could just pick and match Islands with dragons if you want.

Options vs lore basically.

Which matters most?
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>>52932083
>You want to rule the Islands of the East? Fine. But you can't have have dragons and their queen in your lands then because they live in the Northern mountains.
This one. This has lore and a world. The other is customize everything with no lore or world.

Lore >> Cool options >>>>>> many options
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>>52932083
>>52932117
I agree, a CYOA without lore is nice to burn time, but to really enjoy it, there has to be some story. So yeah, I'm for lore too.
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>>52932083
>Options vs lore

>Good lore≥good options>>>shit options>>>>>shit lore
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Tell me what you want in a delinquent school cyoa so I can make sure I include it and pretend I came up with it myself.
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>>52932211
I want to fuck a teacher and smoke on the rooftop.
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>>52932211
Like, everybody is a delinquent or just the reader?
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>>52932211
Option to convert the bad slutty girl into cute tomboy with a troubled past that don't know how to cook or do any girly stuff and she gets mad when she fails but then stops herself because she's done being angry
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>>52932235
Noted.

>>52932241
EVERYBODY.
It's a school for delinquents run by your typical cyoa god patron thingy. Top students get to run their own crime syndicates after they graduate.

>>52932245
Sounds faggy. There's a faction for people like you though.
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Tell me, what kind of waifu archetype/aesthetic gets you going?

I like competent brown girls
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>>52932363
>>52932245
I need to fix her. She can't be too bad though. Like a mild drug addiction or low self esteem I can handle. Maybe a few yandere traits for good measure.
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>>52932042
This one is kind of stupid, and needs a lot of work on balancing, but sure.

Lightspeed, Alpha Genius, Oracle, Molecular Telekinesis, Neutralize

I now exist in permanent bullet time. The goal is to stop the apocalypse, so use alpha genius coupled with oracle to figure out who needs to die. Kill them with neutralize and molecular telekinesis.

All this happens within a few seconds of gaining the powers, so any super that doesn't have lightspeed has no chance to resist. The only thing that honestly is a threat here is a mirror build. Fighting that would be bad, since it'd probably end the world.
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>>52932363
I'm a simple man. I see big tits, I pick. Huge flaw in my consumption of CYOAs.
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>>52932363
Ma nigga
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>>52932408
The author responded to balance complaints by stating he wanted you to be OP. I don't think it's meant to be PvP, but of course that's how it's been played
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What are some nemesis/enemies that would be interesting to face off against on a survival island?

I'm making one that is massively different from normal survival islands and allows you to fully embrace the hellish survival scenarios or make it downright comfy instead with appropriate rewards for whatever you choose.

So go ahead and list what kinds of enemies you think would be cool to battle against.
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>>52932363
Isn't that a robot?
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>>52932211
Instead of everyone being honest-to-god delinquents, it's "delinquents" instead. Complete with silly and harmless antics instead of actual bullying/criminal behaviour.
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>>52932363
Extremely tsundere traps who act like manly, rough bad boys but secretly want to be dominated and be feminine. They will never completely give in to this though. They'll always be rude, loud bullies in public, and insult you while you pound their boypussy at night.

They should also be cute brown elves preferably.
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>>52932444
>I don't think it's meant to be PvP
But the entire premise is pvp. You have to stop several thousand people with the same power selection as you from blowing up the world.
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>>52932363

Tall Muscle Girls with a private nice soft side
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>>52932496
>What are some nemesis/enemies that would be interesting to face off against on a survival island?
>I'm making one that is massively different from normal survival islands and allows you to [...] make it downright comfy
An alien or monster or somesuch (that, if not an attractive humanoid by default, can shape itself into such because reasons) that just wants friends and such, but is woefully (and even dangerously) ignorant of things like what sort of stuff humans (and most other such humanoids, the nemesis excluded if humanoid by default) can tolerate without dying (be it instantly, or from the injuries sustained from the shows of friendship). Naturally, it'll be up to you to teach the poor thing the _right_ way to handle friends.
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>>52932547
It doesn't actually say they have the same selection as you, it only says they begin developing powers. Their powers may very well be random mutation, while you've been afforded an advantage by the time shenanigans

Regardless, it indicates that x amount of random people have powers, there's no reason to assume the turbo autists from here would be among them. Unless you want to play the "I took all the highest tiers, this is how OP I am" game
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>>52932496
A friendly giant girl. She's super nice and really kind. She's also so big that her presence on the island is worse than a locust infestation. Either she dies or everyone else on the Island does. She's completely unaware of this and cannot grasp the concept of limited resources.
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>>52931801
That's not me. That's just a copy that thinks it's me. The real me is stuck in this pile of meat until it rots.
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>>52932042
>Homunculus
>Respec Stats
>Peak Senses

>Superhuman Speed
>Cowardice
>Danger Sense

6 points, now I blow the rest on major powers to win everything forever because they are that broken. Wooo.

>Alpha Mind
>Nemean Durability
>Herculean Strength

Respec Stats gives a HUGE amount of mileage. I can become even stronger by reducing my Alpha Intellect to Superhuman Mind levels, or my Nemean Durability to ANYTHING short of being completely indestructible. The Homonculi get 1/4 of my practically infinite physical strength and durability, and unlike the clones I don't lose any gas if they get killed. If anything actually stronger than me comes up, Cowardice makes me literally impossible to find as long as I'm scared. Danger Sense means I'll still be faster than other people with Superhuman Speed who don't have outright light speed. Too lazy to spend the others.

Really the only flaws are that other people with certain major powers can beat me very easily. A God Mind or someone with Elemental Mastery who picked electricity, for instance. Neutralize and God Mind fucks up just about anyone, since you can just turn off the powers of even other God Minds and make them your slaves while they are powerless. Nemean Durability completely nullifies anything based on physical damage that doesn't involve electricity.
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>>52932083
People come with the land, it's more thematic and it's more realistic feudal inherits land with the serfs as part of the property after all

>>52932363
Blonde genki
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>>52932892
There is no real you. There is no soul, so any perfect copy is in fact the same as the original.
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>>52932901
8 points*
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>>52932245
Can I request the reverse of this? Take the cute troubled tomboy, and corrupt her into your slutty delinquent princess.
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>>52932606
>That feeling when you get her flustered and blushing in private.
>Knowing you're the only one who gets to see her like that.
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>>52932409
I know that feeling well.
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>>52932534
>waifu
>trap
>boy

Waifus cannot be male.
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>>52932913
But that's false. A perfect copy is identical to the original, but both still exist. Shred the original afterwards and it's still destroyed. The fact that you have a perfect copy only matters to you.
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>>52931625
>fire
>not ice/cold
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>>52933024
An instance of you dies, but whatever made you you still exists, so you still exist.
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>>52932986

My nigga
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>>52933020
I'm secure in my heterosexuality.
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>>52933102
>fucks a guy
>I'M HETEROSEXUAL
I will never understand fags.
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>>52933063
Again, false. From the perspective of the you that's destroyed, life ends. You die. You can say whatever you want, but nothing can change that fact. Your consciousness ceases. The fact that another you has a consciousness which continues doesn't change that. You're not a hive mind.
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>>52932496

Amazons that need men to breed with, and can mercilessly train you to be swole as fuck

Skeletons that want to help you trade your flesh for immortality

Fey that want to play with you and prank you forever and ever. Slowly absorbing your cynical memories in exchange for perpetual untroubled youth, discovery and eyes that watch in wonder

That which lurk at the threshold, guardian of the paths to deep knowledge and hidden power

Bored vampires that want prey to chase. Punishing those who are boringly incompetent, and granting ecstasy to the ones who last until the dawn

Man catcher plants that in order to understand and gain sentience trap you, slowly feasting on your dreams of adventure, your subconscious mind and senses extending across the Island

Giant Stone guardians who protect those who bring them offerings of forsaken silver that was stolen from them. They never speak, but sometimes temporairly entrust ancient artifacts to help you bring back more of the stolen treasures

A tribe that believes that you are the one prophesied to come and help them rebuild their strange technologies, but they will not allow you to do anything that doesn't fit their prophesies.

I could go on, but don't want to overwhelm you with my ideas
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>>52933102
look you like dudes even if they are cute you are gay
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>>52933139
Your consciousness is a process, and it continues. If you destroy one of the copies before they can diverge, there is literally no difference between them. Hence you still exist.

Your problem is thinking that 'your' consciousness is a unique trait. It is not.
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>>52932363
Unrealistically tall tomboyish women with a geeky side. Ideally either delicious brown or pale freckled redheads.
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>>52933139
You could say that for every passing attosecond. Panta Rei.
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>>52933138
>femininity is cute
>masculinity is cool

If you want to fuck cute things you're hetero. If you want to fuck cool things you're gay.

This is the truth.
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>>52933171
>gay
>attracted to femininity

Pick 1
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>>52933196
So faggots just change the definitions of words?

Ok.
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>>52933180
Doesn't matter if it's unique or not. From the perspective of one of the two mes, life ends. Nothing you say can change that, and nothing you say can convince me that the fact that another perfect duplicate process going on will somehow matter when mine doesn't keep going on.
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>>52933139
I've no problem with wanting to be immortal, but I find it hilarious that people are so scared of death that they would literally kill themselves so that a separate copy of them might live forever.
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>>52933238
I find it funny that people who are scared of death waste their finite time picking immortality options in cyoas.

This place is hell.
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>>52933213
>attracted to boys
>not gay

Pick 1
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>>52933164
>Fey that want to play with you and prank you forever and ever. Slowly absorbing your cynical memories in exchange for perpetual untroubled youth, discovery and eyes that watch in wonder

I think he is asking for enemies anon
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>>52933270
I'll pick not gay. Boys =/= traps.
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>>52933227
>Doesn't matter if it's unique
>proceeds to say why he thinks it matters why its unique
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>>52933285
>Boys =/= traps.
Not only gay but delusional too
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>>52933138
It's not gay if the penis is femine.
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>>52933346
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>>52932363
I want a waifu with bad breath that belches in my face.
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>>52931940
You could always update it, I suppose, after some time has passed. I've seen a few CYOA authors update their earlier works to keep up with the changing times and anon's demand for MORE OPTIONS, MORE POWERS, MORE ENEMIES, and MORE WAIFUS.

At any rate, I'm curious, but were the aspects listed here the first four or the only four you were going to put in it?
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>>52931329
Skye needs hugs.
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May I ask if anyone remembers the name of that cyoa about being stuck on a space station with optional mutant monsters?
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>>52933588
You may.
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>>52933588
Derelict station?
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>>52933222
That is precisely how you get 72 genders that the snowflakes expect us treat seriously.
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>>52932496
Everyone of those Island cyoas kinda hints that the Island is a living, sentient hellscape that's not just hostile, it deeply and personally hates you. And I'm just thinking that what the fuck is there even to eat or drink in that shithole.

I wonder if this fruit is edible?
*shits guts out*
Guess not!

Maybe I can use these leaves to make a temporary shelter?
*skin peels off from anywhere they touched*
Welp, at least I didn't try wiping my ass!

Hopefully this stream other animals seem to have drunk from is safe.
*brain explodes from ears due to mega-aggressive parasite infestation that native fauna is immune to*
Still better than getting caught by the nemesis!

You shouldn't turn it into full autism survival sim but single section about "How the fuck didn't you die first week?" could be cool. Choices could be something like 'taken in by local cannibal tribe who taught you how to survive, don't try to welsh on replayment", "you woke up with strange mechanism bolted to your arm/head/ass that gives simple instructions, occasionally demands that you perform that strange task", "a horrifying techno-organic monster did some surgery on you and as result, you can digest any organic matter on the island safety. Try to not think about long-term consequences."
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>>52933616
Yeah that's the one. Thank you!
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>>52933759
I thought that the island is just a living sentient hellscape that is an asshole not that hates you
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>>52933102
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>>52933273
>>52933273

Ok, I was thinking that most of these could have good and bad versions that cost or grant points respectively.

How about:
Their pranks can hurt or be mean, and are always embarrassing. They don't really love you they just want to pretend to be parents. If you are critical of their parenting style, they will give the ungrateful and willful child the bottom blistering reminder to be grateful, and it will take a lot of begging and tears to make them believe that you learned your lesson. But they will hug you and soothe your behind once you behave, and by the next time you are whirling to their dervish dance all the unpleasant memories will be forgotten.

If you don't know what medieval fair ones are like, you can't fully understand what being trapped forever as their Stockholm syndrome doll means.

All of the choices I wrote I was trying to make some form of a sweet damnation that is supposed to appeal to someone, and repulse others.
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>>52932363
Confident, competent, aggresive, dom, big, etc etc in any type of mix

I simply don't like shy moe girls.
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>>52933227
You literally just said "mine" YOU do keep existing. you are not unique, you created 2 of yourself and 1 dies. 1 doesn't. You are both of them.
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>>52932006
How horrible do you have to be to laugh at your own self suffering?
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>>52933938
This reminds me some dude posted a hentai here where the kid wakes up in a reversed genderroles world and he prostitutes himself to some girls. ANyone got it?
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>>52933963
You just have to hate yourself, no horribleness required.
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>>52933892
>bottom blistering reminder to be grateful,
What?
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>>52933948

If I am both of them, then both of them want to continue existing.

Why would I suddenly decide that I am disposable?
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>>52933270
To be fair, while they do have male parts, you can't TELL that. They look female and your attrated to that. You find out they got parts you aren't comfortable with but your still like "Eh, they look like a woman."

Never looked at a dick or a vagina and said "thats looks amazing" well there was that one time but my point stands.
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>>52932378
Oh go and forcefeed a prostitute eggs.
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>>52933993
Oh you don't, you 100% don't, that wasn't the argument. but others do. Others would accept that 1 will die and 1 will live and take that option.

I don't either, I'd take transference if that was an option but a copy? god no.
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>>52933991

There are parents out there that would think that they are doing a favor, helping their children avoid prideful unwarranted self-importance.

Plus I was trying to write in a touch of horror and inhuman thinking into the behavior of the fae.

They want to play the perfect parents, and will not let that fantasy get spoiled.

Read up on medieval fairy stories, they were horrible and cruel creatures if they thought that they were scorned.
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>>52934094
No no that i understand that the fae are fucked up but the bottom blistering reminder to be grateful is what i don't understand
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>>52934022
Ok, wow. RPG is fucking broken. Let's see how far we can push this.

Healing factor 1
Immunity 3
Sustenance 5
Beauty 8
Discipline 9
Speed Leaner 11
RPG 13
Photographic memory 16
Courage 17
Mind Reading II 20

So the goal here is to get a body that requires minimal maintenance while spending as much time as possible becoming the best at everything. Beauty, courage and mind reading are basically for the times you want to have sex, fixing your crippling anxiety, neckbeardedness and letting you figure out what to say.

But seriously, RPG is broken - this sort of build should let you become a good enough scientist to force a singularity all on your own.
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>>52932310

I think I'll do that next time. I already kinda started in that direction with lines like:

>Designed to handle any size, shape or type of apparatus that might be encountered in the depths and maximize collection efficiency.

I was hoping that it would sound less lewd that way and help emphasize that's it's only her duty and not something she gets pleasure from. Thanks for suggestion, I think that works perfect for this.
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>tfw you've written so many options you forgot some of them
am i retarded?
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>>52934274
>not reading the options you just wrote for a refresher
yes
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>>52933877
I don't think taking life advice from a guy who died twice is a good idea.
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>>52931625
Darkness
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>>52934268
Going scientific is the best way to not sound lewd.

It sounds really fucking weird in a normal conversation, though.
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>>52934298
there is lots of options
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>>52934353
read harder?
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>>52934055
it's not gay if you fall for it, it's gay if you go on with it after the revelation of the fact
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>>52934345

>It sounds really fucking weird in a normal conversation, though.

Definitely. But I think it works for Lavender builds which I certainly wouldn't think count as normal conversation. Maybe here they do.
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>>52934368
it would take so long to read it all
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>>52934442
Read faster then
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>>52934022
>Physical
Muscle Mass, Regeneration, Stamina, Immunity, Grace, Down Under, Durability (11)

>Mental
RPG, Heightened Senses, Google Glass (6)

>Paranormal
Shadow, Liar, Charm, Phermones, Sex Factor (-2)

>Drawbacks
Weak, Late Bloomer (0)

All around improvements and quality of life. Look good, feel good, enjoy life.
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>>52934402
>abandoning your waifu because she's vaginally disprivileged

You are scum of the earth.
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>>52934127

We bend over backwards to make you happy and give you everything that you need and instead of so much as a thank you, you start complaining and criticism?
If you think that we are mean and controlling maybe you need a reminder how other kids are treated when they embarrassed their parents before the Lord's of the realm. Or did you forget that the wind is an incorrigible gossip?
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>>52934307
It's not life advice, it's the objective truth.
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>>52934572
>implying you can waifu a man
>implying anything with a penis that is feminine or otherwise would be my waifu
Fucking degenerate.
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>>52934268
How bad was your sexual abuse that you can't even bring yourself to type out words related to male anatomy?
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>>52934610
Just ignore him, he thinks Jesus died twice so he obviously could care less about the truth.
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>>52934623
>"muh degeneracy"
The last bastion of those with no quarter.
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>>52934572
Well there's more to it than that. If I were to be at the point I'm willing to be sexually intimate with someone, I would hope that they would be willing to disclose this kind of thing beforehand instead of waiting until we're both undressed. It comes across as dishonest to me and that's just as much of a dealbreaker as the dick, if not more so.
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>>52934651
And piggybacking off of that, who the hell has a fetish for not enjoying sex? How does that even work? That spiel about how your characters' orgasms work is just plain weird.
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>>52933020
But they can have a penis, like futa waifus for example. It's also traditional that you can add a trap to the list of waifus.
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>>52934667
Why can't you admit to your love of the dick? You don't want to be as deluded as a certain lesbian we know, do you?
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>>52934623
I'd waifu anything alive with a hole at this point.
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>>52934706
It's not that weird. I too have a fetish for the girl I'm having sex with to not enjoy it. The more she hates it, the more I love it. Fetishes are just fetishes. You can't explain or judge them.
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>>52934723
>I'd waifu anything alive with a hole at this point.

Today I will remind them
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>>52933270
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>>52934716
I fuckin' LOVE dicks.
Traps still aren't gay tho
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>>52934761
Don't believe that t b h. The odds of getting infected if you're the penetrator are extremely low. He was an idiot for not wearing a condom though but still, seems like a fake story. Typical /r9k/ bullshit meant to propegate paranoia and keep others inside their little bubble.
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>>52934761
>barebacking a girl
>barebacking a "girl"
Neither is particularly safe, no matter how trustworthy they might seem.
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If it has a penis

You're gay

Sorry
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>>52934777
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>>52931329
DO we finally have enough authors for a waifu cyoa ? Can someone make it please ?
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>>52934832
So cuntboys aren't gay then.
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>>52932211
The ability to use hypnotism/mind control.
A waifuable public morals/disciplinary committee officer that's basically Sabar.
Plenty of tomboys.
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>>52934850
Any author can create a waifu cyoa anon there is no need to wait for more
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>>52934651

That has nothing to do with anything. I just really don't like them. I'm sorry if you're offended by the fact that not all women are attracted to your particular brand of naughty bits.

>>52934706

It's not a fetish. They're just fictional characters doing what they do. It has nothing to do with me.
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Who is the top world building author in making cyoas?

Highlander?
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>>52934855
>Sabar
>Not Saibah
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HUSBANDOS > WAIFUS

YOU LITERALLY CAN'T PROVE ME WRONG
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>>52934753
But you enjoy it. That's the point of a fetish. Having a clear fetish for something and then claiming you hate it is some sort of denial.
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>>52934896
>Saibah
>Not Seiba
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>>52934873
NO I mean a waifu cyoa with the authors in it !
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>>52934902
Anything with a penis automatically loses
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>>52934852
>cuntboys
You are literally bringing in fictional creations into an argument. Is this the autism of the century?
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>>52934895
Highlander, UW Anon, SDA, Bliss, Imaginos, Bloodmage, are all really, really good. Probably have to give it to HL and SDA.

Onionbreadsticks is also showing promise.
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>>52931329
I miss the time when boxwine was with us and this general didn't have the equivalent of a screeching retard in every single thread
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>>52932211
Girls with animal ears and tail.
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>>52934972
You forgot to add Italics to that list.

>>52934895
Bliss maybe.
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>>52934919
Please just let it go. She's touching herself to you arguing with her. She's legitimately fucked up sexually.
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>>52934895
>Bliss
>>52935020
>>52934972
Fully agreed.
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>>52934895
Yup.
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>>52934843
I for one welcome our new /rr/ overlords
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>>52932211
The ability to rape a Sukeban cutie, blackmail her into not telling anyone, get her pregnant, get her to confess that she always had a crush on you, reach 20 and graduate from your gang, get married after having two kids, pimp out rides for a living and spend the weekend taking the kids to illegal car shows.
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>>52934998
Never have I agreed with a post as much as I am now.
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>>52935020
Italics will never ever finish Pokemon Personified and make new OC with bunch of worldbuilding in it.

What a waste.
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>>52935109
What happened to boxwine anyways?
>>
I'm going to post my updated cyoa in the next 36 hours
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>>52935140
(S?)He says they will be done with exams soon and might make a couple small CYOA's to get back into making them.
I for one am excited! I miss Box Wine.
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>>52935176
We don't want it. We only need more shitposts. Apparently.
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>>52935176
Which one is that?
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>>52935187
That sounds divine. Hope the general will be a bit less retarded then. Good to see someone else who likes boxwines stuff, he is rarely brought up nowadays
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>>52935221
:^)
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>>52934878
>makes half a dozen characters whose whole purpose in life is to be baby factories more monsters that could use the as cock sleeves
>Why do you silly boys think I'd ever like your dirty gross dicks!

>>52935036
My autism prevents me from ignoring posts like the one above. She's so infuriating.
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>>52935232
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>>52935268
His weanus beanus?
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>>52935231
I do anon. But I also liked him(her?) as a person. My only regret is I don't have any cool OC to show off to them yet .
Quality ITT has really taken a hit this last month.
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>>52935304
Yeah, I like them(?) too, I don't do OC, which I know ain't great but I don't have a creative touch. Best of luck for you tho.
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>>52932892
The solution to that is to do things gradually. Cybernetics. Attach mechanical bits to your existing brain and take away organic bits of your brain, piece by piece, until it's all mechanical and you should be able to freely move around between systems.
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>>52935249

All those typos anon...might want to settle down before you give yourself a aneurysm! Anyway, I already explained how my Lavender characters work and why. I'm sorry if they're just to deep and complex for you.
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>>52931714
Uh, yeah? I get to die, while knowing that there's still some part of me left to know that I've died. That's all I've ever wanted, the only reason I haven't committed suicide is that a dead person doesn't know they're dead.
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>>52935402
>all those typos
>writes "a aneurysm"
>writes "to deep"

>claims to make "deep and complex characters"

This is bait. This is such bait that I think you went full circle and you're actually serious. Which is frightening.
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>>52934610
Truth can't be subjective.
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>>52931940
AHHHHH THIS IS WHY YOU DON'T POST WIPS YOU FUCKING IDIOT. JUST MAKE IT EVEN GETTING SOMETHING SHITTY IS BETTER THAN NOTHING AND NOW THAT YOU'VE ALREADY OVERANALYZED IT THERES NO TURNING BACK
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>>52935346
Neither did I until I tried brother. It's fun to try at least once, and I think you'll appreciate OC a lot more.
Of course you don't have to do it if you don't want to, but don't be afraid! Remember that
>err'body wanna be an author but ain't nobody wanna make no good-ass CYOA's!
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>>52935452
Truth doesn't exist. Only your and everyone elses perception of reality
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>>52935502
Is the Matrix real?
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>>52935506
If you perceive it as real it will be real to you.
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>>52935523
But will it be real regardless of what I perceive it to be?
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>>52935533
Things that cannot be perceived are not real, perception defines reality, not the other way around.
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>>52935533
I don't know. I only know my perception of reality.
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>>52935546
What does it mean when you can perceive something, but someone else can't?
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>>52935457
>Not posting WiPs because teasing autists is much better than finishing OC
Get on my level pleb!
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>>52935436

They're just lewd characters that aren't all that deep or thoughtful, but they do seem to be to complicated for some people here to get.
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>>52931329
Do people like semi-detailed descriptions of companions/waifus/various CYOA characters, or just a few snappy sentences to get the gist of what they're like?
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>>52935651
>semi-detailed descriptions
this
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>>52935651
How important are they supposed to be? If you're planning on making a waifu CYOA or whatever, or something that focuses more on the characters, the former is better.
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>>52935651
First. Bulletpoints are not good for explaining people
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>>52935651
snappy sentences are cancer, if you can't even write at least two paragraphs worth of meaningful information for a character don't include them at all.
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>>52932042
>Herculean Strength, Lightspeed, Nemean Durability, Superhuman Mind, Superhuman Healing, Superhuman Senses, Homunculus.
Good ol fun times to be had.
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>>52935651
multiple paragraphs are cancer, if you can't even boil down everything good into a short package for a character don't include them at all.
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>>52934761
He sticked his dick in one of the most filthy spots of the human body. He has no one to blame but himself for not using protection.
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>>52935752
Words are cancer if you can't explain everything about a character in a image don't draw them at all
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>>52935831
>>52935752
>>52935707
Fuck.
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>>52935831
Drawings are cancer if you can't explain everything about a character in 9 straight lines don't even bother
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>>52935020
>>52934972
Out of all of them. Highlander is the only one writing a book.

Makes you think.
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What CYOA does the best companions?
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>>52935847
Characters are fucking cancer, if you can't communicate abstract thoughts via pure telepathy radiating from the CYOA don't even bother.
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>>52935872
this t b h
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>>52935861
Makes you think of what?

How is she going to get around copyright laws?
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If you make a CYOA that you're proud of, should you put a name on it or is that just for fags?
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>>52935967
>that just for fags
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>>52935967
Every author who puts a name has been a massive faggot, no exceptions
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>>52935967
Only if you like unwashed penis
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>>52935402
So if I go ahead and make a Lavender build sporting several oversized cocks that can pump out gallons of thick, potent cum, guaranteed to produce strong healthy warriors for your master, you think we could get an ERP going? The thought of a fallen angel involuntarily spasming on my cocks as she milks them for every last drop of precious cum is hot af. Her monstergirl bffs can also join in if you're into that. And I have no problem working in your fetish. If you want this to be a loveless, business-like interaction about a stud knocking you up for your master's breeding program, I can dig it.
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>>52935865
mine
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>>52936039
Pls stahp
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>>52936039
Don't stop anon I wanna see Angel squirm
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>>52936039
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>>52936039
Not Angel but you don't have to ride cocks in Lavender. I made a Bride-Groom build myself that had me concoct viruses which would infect and enslave worlds Papa Nurgle style. No cocks involved there.
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>>52936039
Sex involving more than one penis is gay though. You might be homosexual, bro.
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Start talking about cyoas right now.
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>>52936145
That'd be a deal breaker. I'm more than willing to include her fetishes, but I also need to get mine in. That totally-not-pleasurable-for-her orgasm her characters are programmed to do to make sure they empty their studs of every last drop of cum sounds incredible.

>>52936181
Not if they're all mine.
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>>52936282
wutz ur favorit waifu cyoa
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>>52936282
ghost cyoa when
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>>52936282
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>>52936282
But... but I wanted to talk about my hasubando CYOA!
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>>52934855
>mind control
>saber

i wonder who could be behind this post
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>>52936282
The reason I like school life cyoas is because mine sucked.
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>>52936419
>Gilgamesh

The worst character in the Nasuverse, which is saying something because the Nasuverse is SHITTTTTT
>>
>>52936419
Gilgamesh is canonically into gentle femdom though. He becomes pudding when Saber Alter talks shit to him in Fate/Carnival Phantasm.
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>>52936282
Genesis did nothing wrong in Pokemon Personified CYOA.
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>>52936471
Gilgamesh is canonically a rapist whore, you dumb fuck.
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>>52936282
All waifu cyoas should include a mystery box that gives them unique traits like "has a penis" or "cannot say no to men who ask her to fuck".
>>
everyday we stray further from god's light
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>>52936503
Wrong.
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>>52936282
I
DEMAND
BOYS
LOVE
RIGHT
FUCKING
NOW
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>>52936554
fuck off you fucking faggot
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>>52936554
Why do you respond to yourself?
>>
Angel. Please respond.
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>>52936574
Man, I could really go for some cock right now owo
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Anybody got that Elf Slave CYOA?
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>>52932363
Tall yanderes.
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>>52935368
Why not just do it all at once? Why do it piece by piece gradually?
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>>52934972
Thanks, anon. But it's not like I'm making CYOAs because I like you or anything.

>>52935861
Hey, I want to write a book too. I'm just too lazy.

>>52935948
It's not that hard, actually. I know two people irl who have published fiction books. I never read any of them but still.
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>>52936554
wait does fujoshi mean girl neet?
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>>52936604
Don't tell anyone I gave this to you.
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>>52936579
>removes the murder option
>not the nigger, forced to wear heels/gag or furshit and weightgain and futashit, or cut off her achilles

huh
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>>52936181
Well of course you're a faggot if you look like an anime dweeb, you dweeb.
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>>52932363
Submissive pets I can play with.
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>>52934902
I guess you were sleeping. What would you do if someone actually made a husbundo cyoa? Would you loose all purpose?
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>>52936696
You mean the average girl?
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>>52936554
My my, now that's my kind of woman.
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>>52936713
He'll still shitpost for more.
Shitposting. Shitposting never changes.
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>>52936713
It got the saber poster to leave, so it might work.
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>>52936713
Seeing as how his purpose is to shitpost, and/or breed fujo antagonism, and/or bait people into making more waifu cyoas to "spite" him, I'd say no.
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>>52934902
WAIFUS > HUSBANDOS

YOU LITERALLY CAN'T PROVE ME WRONG
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>>52936579

Goal
>Fun
income
>Farming
(Hand-made wheat products, Potatoes, other Irish plants)
Age
>Heifer
Origin
>Europe
Skin colour
>pale
Hair colour
>red
Hair style
>Ponytail
Personality
>Hard working
>Submissive
Acquisition
>Circumstance
Living quarters
>The cottage
Outfit
>Denim Overalls
Accessories
>none
Breast Hormones
>Small dose
Transformative drugs
>horns
>cow ears
Surgery
>none
Milking Technique
>by machine
Punishments
>Restraints
>Reprimand
Rewards
>Praise
>Gifts
>Outings

>>52936642
Thank you


>>52936664
That was the only option that people threw a shit-fit over
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>>52936752
Do you have even a shred of evidence that poster isn't a real fujoshi?
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>>52936699
>>52936718
Ah shit. Quoting the right post!
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>>52936782
It's autism. He doesn't have to explain shit.
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>>52936039

I'm not into erp.
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>>52934972
Wow! Thanks for mentioning me. Didn't think people thought my stuff was that good.

>>52935861
I actually have no interest in writing a book. I have reffed and played ttgs for over 30 years though. Lots of storytelling that way.
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OC here, (1/4). I made a genie waifu-maker. It's my first CYOA so it's a bit generic and derivative and probably unbalanced, so sorry about that. And aside from getting a few very frustrating things to work right it was actually kind of fun.

Please excuse the walls of text all all the other autism. I hope a few people enjoy it at least.
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>>52936769
STOP PESTERING ME
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>>52935967
Putting a name on a cyoa you've made makes it easier for people to sort/find your stuff and you don't have to deal with "what (other) cyoas have you made?" questions all the time. You don't have to trip or namefag in the threads to sign your work.
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>>52936834
>OC
This will make an excellent addition to my collection
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>>52936834
(2/4)
There were a few descriptions and things I wanted to change, but I was sort of at the file size limit for most of these so I figured I'd just leave it alone. If a serious problem comes up or people really dislike anything in particular though I'll change it.
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>>52936843
STOP BEING A FUCKING FAGGOT
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>>52936782
1. The posts are self-mocking. Using exaggerated pics of fujo stereotypes combined with all-caps demands. Whoever posts these doesn't like fujos.

2. The posts are inconsistent. Asking for husbandos as a fujo makes no sense. Only a minority of times do they ask for BL. It switches every few posts.

3. The posts are useless. If that person really wanted fujo content they'd sweet-talk the authors or slowly try to influence the general. This accomplishes nothing.

4. The posts are antagonizing. There is too much focus on waifus, specifically how bad they are and how husbandos would be better. It's as if the poster wants the general to make more waifu content to spite them.
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>>52936843
EM GNIRETSEP POTS
>>
Please do not respond to the obvious shitposter. Thank you.
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>>52936834
Can I make myself a girl for /u/ purposes??
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>>52936879
(3/4)

>>52936853
Thanks. I hope you enjoy it.
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>>52936939

>>52936930
I tried to not specify what the protagonist was one way or another to accommodate that, but I might have messed it up somewhere. If you see something that interferes, please tell me.
>>
>>52936834
Did you make the incubus cyoa?
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>>52936834
>genie are djinn are synonyms
First "are" should be "and".
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>>52936996
He said it's his first CYOA.
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>>52936834
Feedback:
Title looks nice and stands out well without being an eyesore. Nice font.

The text in the first sentence is a bit hard to read as it blends a tad too much into the houses/background image. You could do a few things to fix that. White drop shadow under that paragraph or move the house images up a tad so they're more visible and make the text box a bit more opaque are 2 options.

Good color scheme with a nice simple look. I'd probably have done a slight canvas/fiber paper texture on the brown background to match the texture of the header image, but that's just me.

Like the options so far as I'm reading through it.
>>
>>52936977
No I'm asking if there is an option to make me a girl. To be lesbians with the waifu.
>>
>>52936495
>Gilgamesh is canonically a rapist whore, you dumb fuck.
How so? I don't remember him getting to rape anyone.
>>
>>52936996
No, this is my first time making a CYOA, though I used this program before. I looked at a couple cyoas to try and make it look less amateurish (who knew drop shadows were this important?) but that's about it.

>>52937025
Oh. Well, I didn't think of anything to actually change the protagonist, but that sounds like a wish you could ask for if the genie's strength was high enough (it's a plot in enough Magical Girlfriend series that you probably could get away with it with that low a tier). If there's enough interest I could make it a dedicated Perk though.

>>52937013
>>52937019
Thanks for your feedback. I'll go about fixing what I can. There originally was a parchment texture to it, but it increased the filesize too much and I couldn't get the seams working right. I'll try again in the future.
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>>52936834
It looks like a decent cyoa but I feel absolutely no incentive to build for it. I don't know if that's the cyoa's fault or me just falling into depression.

Seems impressive for a first cyoa.
>>
>>52936642
>>52936774

Subrace
>High elf
Encounter
>Conquered
Age
>Adult
Particular Characteristics
>Submissive
>Friendly
>Clever
Brand of ownership
>Intricate choker
Magical Enchantments
>Adore rune
>Addict rune
Clothing Articles
>Formal Dress
>Casual Clothing
Living Accommodations
>Guest room
Slave treatment
>Respectful
Slave Severity
>Firm
Punishments
>Reprimand
>Pillories
(The "Paraded through town, being pelted by rotted produce" kind)
Training and Education
>Combat
>Craftsman
>Mathematics
Employment
>Guard
Gifts and Trinkets
>Fine jewelry
>Warm cloak
>Outings
>Small pet
>>
>>52937086
>If there's enough interest I could make it a dedicated Perk though.
Yes!!
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>>52936642
>Celestial Elf
>Spirited Away
>Teenager
>Friendly, Clever, Obsessive
>Leather Collar
>Addict Rune, Adore Rune
>Stamina Rune, Sorcerer Rune
>Maid Outfit, Casual Clothing
>Master Bedroom
>Respectful
>Appeasing
>Reprimand, Spanking, Isolation
>Courtesan, Sorcery, Literature
>Sorcery
>Journal, Free Time, Fine Jewelry, Warm Cloak
>Cast Light, Cleanse, Teleport, Nullify, Treatment, Heal, Heat, Mystic Arrow

Adventures in the wild, then re-enact skin game whenever we can get away with it. TIME FOR SHENANIGANS. And sex, we'll be having sex too, because hey, elf slave.
>>
>>52937086
I'm down for that perk
>>
>>52936822
But lewdposting with SDA is fine? You know you want it. You spam this shit constantly. There's no point trying to keep up appearances on an anonymous image board. Admit you want to be a slutty monstergirl and get bred by giant monsterboy cocks, whore.
>>
>>52937086
>Thanks for your feedback. I'll go about fixing what I can. There originally was a parchment texture to it, but it increased the filesize too much and I couldn't get the seams working right. I'll try again in the future.
What program are you using to make this in?
>>
>>52936822
Oh hey, Angel, you should hop into the Discord some time.
>>
>>52936922
> Asking for husbandos as a fujo makes no sense

I thought about that too. If fujoshis get off to boys fucking, they have no use for boys into her. Then he's straight and not gay.
>>
>>52937210
For once I'm okay with you cucks stealing away ""authors""
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>>52936834
Cute. I like it.
>>
>>52937110
It's probably the walls of text. If you can believe it these are cut down from what they were originally. They used to be absolutely out of control. Thanks for the compliment though.

>>52937151
>>52937138
Okay. Look forward to it in the finalized, cleaned up version.

>>52937202
Corel Draw. I know, I know, but it's the program I'm most familiar with.

>>52937238
Thank you.
>>
>>52937264
>I know, I know, but it's the program I'm most familiar with.
No shame in using what you know. I made mine in Flash.
>>
>>52937264
Question: Why are you limiting accessories to just two?

Still reading, but I like it a lot thus far.
>>
>>52936834
This is a phenomenal first CYOA. I tip my hat to you! Also, was anyone else looking for a "be the genie" option somewhere in there--preferably the drawbacks? Seems an easy way to multiply the appeal of the CYOA.
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>>52936642
>Celestial Elf
Caution has no place in a life lived to the fullest.
>Salvation
I have a soft spot for dying critters I find on the streets.
>Adult
Don't feel like taking on an Elder, don't like the pedobait.
>Friendly, Obsessive, Clever.
Like I said, I have a soft spot for nearly-dead things on the road. I probably showed her more kindness in a few weeks than she knew in years.
>Leather Collar
A compromise; I don't feel like burdening her with metal, don't want to spend the money on a fancy piece of jewelry, and I'm not stupid enough to go with the 'nothing' option.
>Clear Rune, Sorcerer Rune.
As far as I'm concerned, the Clear Rune is more a blessing than anything else; Sorcerer is so her magic can benefit me (because she will need to pull her own weight, this is not entirely a charity case), as well as a way for me to show trust in her.
>Worker Drags, Casual Clothing
Something she can afford to get dirty in, and something comfy and nice to wear around town, neither of which will break the bank or be demeaning.
>Guest Room
I can swing it.
>Respectful
The only good choice for me.
>Firm
Scales need to balance out in the end; she, can't be a freeloader.
>Reprimand, Spanking, Flogging.
In order of least severe to most severe.
>Sorcery, Literature, Courtesan.
Literature and Sorcery go hand-in-hand, imo. Courtesan for obvious reasons.
>Sorcery
How she will make the scales balance out. And this should be playing to her strengths.
>Journal, Elven Trinkets, Free Time, Furniture.
Simple but not cheap furnishings for her room; trinkets, to make it feel nicer for her; a journal; and the free time to enjoy it all.
>Cleanse, Heal, Treatment.
Good for if I, or her, get injured, but this is also her profession: she's a healer.
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>>52936834
Are we able to pick more then one bodytype to "flesh" them out?
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>>52937333
>This is a phenomenal first CYOA. I tip my hat to you!
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>>52937333
*Tip your hat* one more fucking time and I'll stuff it right into your ass.
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>>52937387
>and I'll stuff it right into your ass
*tips fedora*
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>>52932606
I like that too but with a more primal nature in mind too. That and yanderes.
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>>52937083
He wanted to rape Saber in the earlier installations I believe, or intended to do so.

His legend also correlates to rape. He should also have an epic beard, but he doesn't.
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>>52937387
>one more fucking time and I'll stuff it right into your ass.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QYzZ3fPCqFg
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>>52937313
Sounds like a nightmare. Good that you stuck to it though.

>>52937325
Originally there was only the first row, then I came up with the second. The limit of two made sense when there were fewer options, and then when more of them came up that allowed Jewelry Box to have its own advantage, which made sense in terms of jewels/accessorizing. I might bump both them up though. But the idea is that there are a limited number of these in Heaven, which is why you can't just get everything due to "magic." That also ties into the leftover costumes and why each genie has a total magic budget. It's contextual.

>>52937333
Thanks. What I'll end up doing probably is adding two perks, one for a gender change for /u/ purposes (or BL with Cute!) and one genie application form.

>>52937368
Later on there's someone whose personality is a mix between two Attitudes, so why not? I figure a few people also might want to mix Cute! with Amazonian.
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>>52937179

I'm just not into erp and I definitely don't want to rp anything that involves disgusting dicks OK? Why is that so hard for you to understand?
Elemental dragonanon already had a good build that he thought would synergize with Porphyra and inquired about what he'd need to do to get rights to her use. That was good character inter action and was just fine. But I have no desire to sit here and chat about your gross dick and what you want to do with it. I don't fucking care!

>>52937210

I can't... I have "mousy" "whiny" voice. When I rped on Roll20 people kept thinking there was something wrong with my mic, but it was just me.... People will make fun of me more than they already do;_;
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>>52936834
>>52936879
>>52936939
>>52936977
I am a simple man. I see Persona images in CYOAs, I show off how Mainline has better girls.

>Ifrit
>Weird Science
>Excited

>Medium
>Tattoos, Collar + Leash
>Modern, Lovely Assistant
>Life of the Party, Scheherazade

>Cellphone
>Single Room (4)
All the Vessel Exterior options seem to be mutually exclusive. Maybe move the points description down to Vessel Interior?

>Patron Haint (demons) (8)
>Guardian Spirit (race)
>Lust Potion (attitude)
>Magical Realm (1)
>Cursebane (2)
>No Misunderstandings (1)

>Mischievous Mind (race)
>Memory Problems (+1) for fluff reasons
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>>52936634
It means Rotten Girl. NEET just means Not in Education, Employment, or Training.
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>>52937430
>He should also have an epic beard, but he doesn't.
Nothing about the Nasuverse makes an inkling of sense, historically and in terms of folklore / mythology.
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>>52937441
Discord is a text chat client. It has voice channels, but nobody uses those.

Amusingly, Elemental Dragonanon was me.
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>>52937475

Wasn't Gilgamesh supposed to be an old man and not some sort of supermodel?
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>>52937486

I might have to give it a try then. Probably not today though.

I didn't know that was you lol. I liked your build and felt like you actually understood how my characters worked, which seems to be a struggle for everyone else. Probably cuz my bad writing.
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>>52937597
He was actually described as quite beautiful and not overly masculine.
Of course eventually he was an old man as he lived a long time.
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>>52936939
How many points do the drawbacks give that don't specify them?
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>>52937464
>All the Vessel Exterior options seem to be mutually exclusive. Maybe move the points description down to Vessel Interior?
Yes, they were intended to be. It must have gotten mixed up when I was rearranging the document into textboxes.

Thanks for the build. What is the fluff reason?

>>52937647
Unless otherwise specified, a perks take one point, drawbacks give one point. It was in the description of perks but it should probably be repeated in the lower description too.
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>>52937597
The original legend depicts his reign as that of 126 years.

Gilgamesh's physical age in the Nasuverse isn't exactly consistent. He would be around mid-late twenties (as is his prime) in Fate/Zero, and late teens to early twenties in Fate/Stay Night.
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>>52937610
Yeah, drop in whenever.

Business is business. It's not that hard to grasp. My dragon mixed business with pleasure, but that's just a bonus for him.
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First SDA, and now Wyrm cucking Angel from me. What am I doing wrong?
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>>52937737
Liking Angel?
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>>52937737
>What am I doing wrong?
caring about the village bicycle
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>>52937737
Angel like it's when you're a little forceful with her. You just need to show her that your a dominant man who knows how to manhandled her
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>>52937387
That feeling when you're too much a normie to get how you've transgressed and thought you were just using a generic, semi-archaic display of gratitude with a possible throwback to Colbert.
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>>52937796
>Normie
even worst
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>>52936834
Nice work. Repost at the start of the next thread.
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>>52937737
>Literally caring about Angel in any capacity
Get some taste.
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>>52937486
There's a CYOAG discord?

Send us a link, lad.
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>>52937737
Possessing any emotion towards Angel other than disgust, pity, or apathy, I'd wager.
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Rolled 4 (1d4)

>>52931329
1. Tiger
2. Manticore
3. Taurus
4. Raccoon
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>>52937610
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>>52936554
when did we get women into boy love on cyoa? I didn't think we appealed to that demographic.
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>>52937838
It's in the pastebin in the OP.
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>>52937724

>My dragon mixed business with pleasure

That's how we sirens entrap you;)
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>>52936879
>headlights
wot
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>>52936039
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>>52937881
>Rolled 4 (1d4)
>Raccoon

This is a good death.
There's no shame in this.
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>>52937901
You know, I checked the pastebin before posting that, thinking it'd probably be there, and I completely ignored it.
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>>52937916
I think it means she's got pokies.
Or maybe just tig ol' bitties.
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>>52936554
holy shit, that's my gf down to a T.

Speaking of that, two person CYOA when?
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>>52937819
Will do, though hopefully I have enough time to implement small changes before that happens.

>>52937916
Blue board, didn't want to skirt the line too closely. But what sort of thing could you only cover up with an excuse of "cold weather" , especially if it was constant, and would draw enough attention to potentially cause trouble with people walking past?
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>>52936834
>>52936879
>>52936939
>>52936977
When will you be revealing the exact nature of the sinister bullshit that's alluded to in various points in the CYOA, and how much (if at all) our choices affect it?
Also why does the outro make it seem like you might not ever get (around) to summoning your genie out of her vessel?
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>>52937737
I think the trick is addressing her in character. She seems to enjoy that.

>>52937908
You're such a slut Angel!
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>>52932083
her face looks like a butt when she is on the bench
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>>52936939
Can I just use bonus bottle to get a marid for super wishes? I'm a little confused
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So is Angel just he mascot of CYOA now or what?
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Everyone wants to rape Angel, to beat up Angel, to be a lesbian with Angel, to tenderly love Angel, to be noticed by Angel.
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>>52937438
You did a really great job, and I love the dark, hidden tidbits. Grants a lot of character to what would otherwise have been a (literal) wish fulfillment CYOA.
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>>52934022
Physical
Grace (19)
Regeneration (17)
Strength (15)
Durability (14)
Reflexes (13)

Mental
Focus (12)
Discipline (11)
Speed learner (9)
RPG (7)
Heightened senses (6)
Courage (5)

Paranormal
First class (4)
Charm (3)
Charm speak (2)
Shadow (1)
Ten out of ten (0)
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>>52938098
YES
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>>52936879
Headlights has me a little confused by the image alone, senpai. Is this like anime-style blushing or something?
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>>52934972
You forgot DSA.
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>>52937990
The sinister bullshit happens if you take Broken Facade no matter what and it's the worst possible thing, but that is pretty obvious from context. Otherwise, it's a big problem you're "eventually" going to have to face in the future, and dealing with Heaven is going to be the source of it. What exactly the sinister bullshit is depends on whatever you want it to be. It's your adventure, after all. In IDOJ, it was the Blue Djinn threatening Jeannie and Nelson, in Oh My Goddess it was dealing with Celestin and some of the events in the later chapter, etc. It was a common enough storytelling thing that I figured I'd include it.
The outro is worded that way so that you can imagine the exact circumstances of you two actually meeting. If you don't like the vessel just showing up in your room, then its "clinginess" is eventually going to make it fall out of the sky on you, or you'll find it in a gift shop, etc. Open endlessness. If that wasn't conveyed I can change it though.

>>52938040
Yes, but she'd still be limited by Three Wish Limit and Pure of Heart, plus you'd have much fewer points to work with for both your genies.

>>52938122
Thanks. I appreciate it.

>>52938133
See >>52937976. I might have been too concerned with the blue board thing.
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>>52938098
>>52938119

No.
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>>52936834
>>52936879
>>52936939
>>52936977
I made a whole build already and then realized I got magical realm and ream confused. It makes houri completely pointless. Why would I want a sexy genie that is into something I'm not at all?

So with that in mind I had to change most of my build.

>Ifrit
>Voluntary
>Happy to be here
>Overkill
>RGB skin (red), tattoos
>Modern
>Housewife, Courtesan
>Cellphone

>Itty Bitty (17)
>Patron haint (9)
>Love potion (8)
>Lust potion (7)
>Magical realm (6)
>Guardian spirit (6)
>Minor shapeshift (3)
>Giant (1)
>Mini (-1)
>Minor psychic link (-2)

>Mischievous mind (-1)
>Endless Inlaws (0)

>Companionship

Other than the houri thing, it's a pretty good cyoa. I still managed to more or less make the build I want, but I just had to unfortunately put her in the itty bitty container. That's not gonna be fun, especially with overkill.
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>>52938177
>Yes, but she'd still be limited by Three Wish Limit and Pure of Heart, plus you'd have much fewer points to work with for both your genies.
Sure, I was just thinking of using it for an easy fountain of youth or other magical items
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>>52932211
copious amounts of cute punk/goth girls, lesbianism, and fun delinquent activity
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>>52938029
That's not even Angel, just some pretender. Not everyone who puts a space after the links is Angel.
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>>52936>Marid
Let's go with the classic.
>Voluntary
>Easily Flustered
>Amazon
These two together. Yes.
>Barefoot, Tattoos
>Modern Outfit, Lovely Assistant Outfit
>Housewife, Scheherazade
>Hookah

>Single Room (4) [11]
>Phenomenal Cosmic Power (Free)
>Intoxicating Aroma (Free)
>Love Potion (Free)
>Magical Realm (1) [10]
>World Atlas (3) [7]
>Minor Psychic Link (1) [6]
>Major Psychic Link (2) [4]
>Foresight (4) [0]
>Bonus Bottle (8; Interloper, Old Friend) [-8]

>Pure of Heart (+3)
>Three Wish Limit (+5)

>Xian
>Dominant
>Curvy
>Collar and Leash, High Heels
>Chinese Dress, Glorified Jewelry
>Businesswoman, Life of the Party, Courtesan, Entertainer
>Cellphone
>Cramped, But Cozy
>Magical Girl(friend) (-4) [2]
>Guardian Spirit (-4) [-2]
>Friend Upstairs (Free)
>Lust Potion (-1) [-3]
A slutty, mid-power genie to grant minor wishes around the house and "grant wishes" with her mundane skills. Friend Upstairs and Guardian Spirit make her an excellent passive assistant. Maybe I could even spend a wish from my Marid to tweak her a little...


>Turbulent Mood (+1) [-2]
>Easily Trapped (+2) [0]
>Terminal Battery (Free)
Since she lives in my phone, "Easily Trapped" shouldn't be much of a bother.
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>>52938183
If you hadn't posted your lewd puffy nips, things wouldn't have turned out this way.
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>>52938164
DSA is just SDA's alter personality.
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>>52938276
Whoops.
>>52936834
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>>52938284
Nah, they have distinct stylistic differences.

DSA actually hated us calling him that because it brought comparisons to SDA, I don't think he'd be thrilled about us joking he is just SDA.
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>>52936853
>This will make an excellent addition to my collection
Is that you Grievous?
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>>52938177
>If that wasn't conveyed I can change it though.
It was probably mainly my paranoia when it comes to CYOAs hinting at something sinister, so no need to change it on my account.

On a less paranoid/sinister note, what sort of Patron Haint would one need to be able to acquire (via wishes) the usual immortality+shapeshifting combo? Would "Body" be sufficient, or is that too ambiguous?
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>>52936834
What powerlevel is required for immortality?
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>>52936834
Houri should specify if it mentions Magical Realm Pitfall or Perk.
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>>52938375
Magical REALM is perk.
Magical REAM is pitfall.
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>>52938375
Magical Realm and Magical Ream are two different things. It is specified.
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>>52938187
Have to agree with this. magical ream makes the houri not worth taking as she has lust which you were warned about and who wants to be forced into a fetish they hate? No one.
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>>52936879
>Peri
>Criminal Record
>Defiant

>Overkill

>Wrist Bangles
>High Heels

>Modern
>Chinese Dress

>Businesswoman
>Scheherazde

>Crystal Ball
>Itty Bitty
>Phenomenal Cosmic Power

>Three Wish Limit
>Mischevious Mind

>Endless Inlaws
>Small Business Owner
>Old Friend

Let her choose whether she wants to be freed, or have me make one or two wishes of her choice (that don't harm me) then be freed.

Let heaven burn.
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>>52938187
I tried to make everyone's drawback match their strength, around a theme. So a genie that's clearly based around fulfilling sexual desire (since she can shapeshift into most of the shapes you want for free and most clearly enjoy it) needs to have a drawback that matches. Genies are always tricky. I hoped it wouldn't be too bad, since she would be indulging in your fetishes without necessarily sharing them (unless you took Magical Realm) but as >>52938406 said that might be too far.

>>52938258
You could do that, but remember, Pure of Heart means she'll only let you wish for that if you manage to set it up so that everyone benefits from the fountain and other items, not just you. You'll need to figure out a way of outsmarting her, and while Marid are naive and trusting personally they're also the wisest of all species.

>>52938342
>>52938370
"Body" would probably get you shapeshifting and healing, but not immortality, because that is much more associated with "eternity" as a concept, which is less concrete and therefore makes a weaker Patron Haint.
For true invulnerability+immortality, you'd need to either stay in a Domestic Goddess' radius forever (even after the end of the earth, you two would have to float through space together at all times), or wish on a Phenomenal Cosmic Power genie.
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>>52936879
>Phenomenal Cosmic Power
>any wish
Oh boy.
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>>52936834
>Houri
>Voluntary
>Happy to Be Here
>Lithe
>Cat Ears, Collar + Leash
>Glorified Jewelry, Maid
>Housewife, Courtesan
>Magic Medium (Not exactly sure what this means, so I'll say it's something that suits a Houri and I've got to hide a gaudy jeweled dildo now.) (+1)
>Cramped, But Cozy (+0)
>Phenominal Cosmic Power (-25)
>Minor Shapeshift (free), Lust Potion (free), Love Potion (free)
>No Misunderstandings (-1), Bonus Bottle (-1)
>Turbulent Mood (+1), Memory Problems (+1), Now I Ain't Sayin' She's A Gold Digger (+5), Magical Ream (Dunno if I get points since it's forced, so I'll guess no.)
>Psycho Childhood Friend (+4)
>Power

Friend Stats, 0 free points
>Three Wish Limit (+5),
>Rank: Magical Girl(friend) (-4), No Misunderstandings (-1)

>Step 1: Wish to be able to alter a genie's powerlevel at will
>Step 2: Power up Psycho GF
>Step 3: Wish for more Genies
>Step 4: Power up Genies
>Step 5: Magical realm forever, wish away 1st genie's shitty fetish.
Is this allowed? I feel like it'd be fun if so.
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>>52938177
>It was a common enough storytelling thing that I figured I'd include it.
Kinda never heard of it since im not into animu

From Broken Facade and all other hints in the text i kinda saw it like a Quiet CYOA of sorts with your djinn given to you to keep an eye on you and keep you down from achiving some kind of status that you would otherwise achive(a Chosen one, new god. eldritch abomination etc.) which Powers That BE don't want you to achive.
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>>52938500
>"Body" would probably get you shapeshifting and healing, but not immortality
That actually sounds like it'd be enough for biological immortality to me. Maybe even sufficiently high regeneration to deal with most damage you'd normally face.
What about basic comfy stuff like doing away with waste production?

Also how exactly does the whole Extra Bottle option work, pointcost-wise?
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>>52938500
What kind of powerlevel would it take to get a full set of textbooks about science 500 years in the future?

What kind of powerlevel would it take to put you into stasis for 500 years?
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>>52936834
Does 100 mi means miles or meters?
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>>52938625
millimeters, Anon.
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>>52938500
Ok so I took a Marid, with tiny bottle living, no misunderstanding and a personality/background that makes her want to serve me, easily trapped terminal battery plus her other drawbacks, which the cyoa doesn't say that they don't give you points as other things are explicity stated to be free. So that gives me around 28 points, which I then spend on the Extra Bottle 28x.075 = 21 points to spend on my new genie.

One of the wishes will be that I she introduces me to the perfect genie that I want to bind to the new bottle, letting me choose species, history and attitude. This wish should work fine as it's not a harmful wish and is a pure intent wish.

Otherwise I'll use that wish to change the Houri "childhood" friend to remove the magical ream disadvantage and tweak her to be more compatible with me, which she'll have agreed to seeing as she has future sight.
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>>52937687
Nemissa (previous pic related) spends the whole game possessing the player's human girlfriend Hitomi (present pic related), though they ping-pong in and out of control for conversation's sake. The latter starts losing her sense of self and/or memory in the late stages of Soul Hackers from continuous possession.
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>>52938569
I'm going to need some time to work through the logic, but cursory glance would make me think that if you couldn't make a huge return on investment, non magically, on your first wish, Gold Digger would make it so that she intentionally twists all your subsequent wishes.

>>52938584
Why not? It's choose your own adventure. All I specified is that there is something bigger going on than just receiving a magical wife, and while I have my own idea of exactly what it is you're free to fill in the blanks with whatever suits you.

>>52938592
Yeah, you could probably get early Wolverine-tier healing (say you got shot, you probably wouldn't die but it would still take weeks to recover) as long as it never got closer to "eternity" or "invulnerability" which are less concrete concepts.
For Bonus Bottle, pay X points, where X is a positive integer. 75% of these are transferred into a second genie, rounded down into the nearest integer. The second genie has that many points of budget to work with, instead of a base of 15.

>>52938605
Depends on the wish. A full set of textbooks, rather than one falling out of the sky from the future randomly, that sounds like at minimum you'd need a Patron Haint with "time." Since "time" is a bit abstract, she'll be weaker than normal, but if you do enough shenanigans with "space-time" you might be able to achieve it. Same with the other one.

>>52938625
Miles. There used to be a km conversion but I ran out of space.

>>52938712
>hich the cyoa doesn't say that they don't give you points as other things are explicity stated to be free.
Oh shoot, I'll fix that right away.
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>>52938712
>bind to the new bottle
>pure of heart
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>>52938177
Endless Inlaws mentions "Eager" as attitude for older relatives, do actually mean Excited? Or is it Happy to be Here?
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>>52938794
Excited. I didn't catch all the terminology changes when I transferred from a document to the image. I'll fix this too.
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>>52938760
It's investment protection, earning money is pointless if you're just going to lose it after, I want to get money and have the magical power to back up keeping it.
The second wish can be some shit about expert market analysis, if I even want to make another wish with her.
I make one wish with each of them to achieve infinite genies, effectively circumventing the downsides for Gold Digger and Three Wishes.
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>>52936834
>Species
Xian.
>History
Voluntary
>Attitude
Numb
>>52936879
>Body
Lithe
>Accessories
RGB Skin: Pale Blue
Wrist Bangles
>Additional Outfits
Chinese Dress
>Mundane Skills
Scheherazade
Businesswoman
>Vessel Exterior
Ring [1]
>Vessel Interior
Pocket Dimension [17]
>Power Level
Patron Haint: Human Life, specifically in regards to its beauty/handsomeness, shape/gender, health and longevity. [9]
>>52936939
>perks
Minor Psychic Link [Free]
Major Psychic Link [Free]
No Misunderstandings [10]
>pitfalls
Terminal Battery [Free]
>>52936977
>interlopers
Small Business Owner
>life goal
Novelty

I'll use their power to give myself a long life, to stay healthy, to make my body or gender what I want it to be, at a given time, within their recharge and power limits. I'll use this longevity, health, and multitude of identities to experience life in the shoes of many, to walk unseen amongst the foreign or to walk noticed as something particularly exotic. To be plain. To be strong.

To see what the future holds, far beyond the time I would normally live. Some people simply read history. I wish to see it, with my own eyes, for as long as possible. On the ground. And in the end, I want to see how it all ends. Perhaps it will make up for not being around to see how to all began, and happened up to now.
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>>52937464
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>>52938760
But could a Patron Haint of Body do away with one's need to produce bodily waste? If not, could she at least repurpose the production into something more beneficial/desirable? What about removing the usual bodily needs, such as sustenance, rest, and respiration?
Also, I'm going to go ahead and assume that you meant getting shot in a manner that would've otherwise been fatal in this:
>early Wolverine-tier healing (say you got shot, you probably wouldn't die but it would still take weeks to recover)
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>>52936834
>not using the djinni categories from Bartimaeus
could be better/10
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>>52938764
What part of willing did you miss.
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>>52936879
For Patron Haint, if I chose the concept of something like "Comicbooks" could I potentially wish for super powers at any time I wanted?
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>>52938760
Magic medium is kind of an oddity as it affects the vessel's use compared to the other options. I don't think it should be removed but perhaps you may be able to come up with a few other similar things that affect how the vessel itself operates with various bonuses or minuses that cost/give points?

Also a nice Perk would be 1pt for another normal skill.
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>>52938929
Well for one you never wrote willing, you just said perfect, and also from the way 'pure of heart' is written it sounds like your wish has to help humanity in general.
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>>52936834
>>52936879
>>52936939
>>52936977
So...what the hell is going on behind the scenes here?

Also, would a Love Genie cover lust-related wishes?
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>>52938712
>which the cyoa doesn't say that they don't give you points as other things are explicity stated to be free
I checked again, this is actually stated in the explanation for Perks, where if you got anything for free or were forced into it you don't get the point loss or gain associated with them.

>>52938828
Sure, the logic is sound, but Gold Digger is about seeing the return on investment. You'll be fine if you only make the one wish, but any subsequent wish is dicey unless you can show results from your own blood, sweat, and tears, not magic.

>>52938871
Probably. I should likely add a line that she can only do so many things at once though, so while you could remove the need to breathe and eat and sleep, maybe at the same time you can't early-Wolverine heal, or vice versa.

>>52938951
The wishes would probably be more related to comic books themselves. Like being able to afford any of them, or producing long lost limited editions out of thin air (if you want Nic Cage's Acton Comics #1, it's yours) or the production of them (writing that one you always wanted to) instead of actually bringing them to life, which is more related to some other concept.

>>52938971
I might. There are a lot of modifications I'm making at once here. Though if you want more skills, I think there is a vessel for that.

>>52939013
Love and Lust are separate, but overlapping concepts. The further you stray from the basic concept, the less able the Patron Haint is to grant the wish. So she might be able to do a little, but nowhere near as effectively as an actual Lust genie.
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>>52938559
>you need either most of the interlopers or most of the pitfalls
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>>52939008
with the perfect genie I could help humanity in general and I must have accidentally edited out the word willing. Either way the genie wouldn't be forced and would want to be bound. This just facilitates it.
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>>52939064
>The further you stray from the basic concept, the less able the Patron Haint is to grant the wish. So she might be able to do a little, but nowhere near as effectively as an actual Lust genie.

Hm, that sucks. I want to be able to manipulate emotions like love while also being able to do crazy shit like being an invisible rapist (don't question my fetishes). Maybe I'll just splurge for the Domestic Goddess
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>>52939064
>I checked again, this is actually stated in the explanation for Perks, where if you got anything for free or were forced into it you don't get the point loss or gain associated with them.
Missed it then and you may want to make it clear under each genie to be on the safe side as someone else also wasn't clear on it in a build post.
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>>52939102
Okay anon, but just remember it has to be pure of heart, after all you did give her no-misunderstanding, so the actual intention of your wish will be clear to her
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>>52939065
Or just pick Marid.
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>>52938177
So we're forced to somehow try and deal with an unstoppable enemy no matter what?

Why didn't you tell us outright that this was an unwinnable trap?
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>>52939064
Honestly, with infinite cosmic level genies, I could probably just wish the Gold Digger downside away.
Or I could just use the infinite cosmic level genies for future wishes.
Also, what would happen if I got rid of the concept of money? Or if reality was rewritten to the point where all property is inherently mine? Would Gold Digger just break/disappear? Or would she have an aneurysm trying to make me get more?
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>>52938814
>Excited
Nice.

2nd question, if one consumes food and drink in the pocket dimension have you eaten in the real world as well?
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>>52939064
>I might. There are a lot of modifications I'm making at once here. Though if you want more skills, I think there is a vessel for that.
That is true but that does lock out other choices and If I were min/maxing then why would I choose a vessel that gives me a single skill compared to saving myself something like 3 points or so?
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>>52938760
>Why not? It's choose your own adventure.
A solid answer is required, fuck vagueness.
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>>52938177
I'm kind of confused, does broken facade mean that the nature of the event also changes or just when it happens?
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>>52939151
>Pure Heart and only Three Wishes

I have plans that would be inconvenienced by these.
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>>52939158
>Waifufags stuck in unbeatable trap.
>Meanwhile I'm sitting pretty after I got to unleash a horrible death genie to spite the world
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>>52939209
Well I don't.
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>>52939227
It means you're probably going to be killed by the unbeatable trap too, you just got to take everyone else out with you.
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>>52936879
Glass Bottle and Magical Medium technically do the same thing.
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>>52932363
Innocent, Oblivious Mothers and Down to earth Nerd girls.
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>>52939158
Do you want the enemy to be unstoppable? Because the implication is only that hard with Broken Facade. Otherwise, what your hardships in life will be is completely open to you. Remember, the Psycho Childhood Friend is the one making the biggest fuss about it and she explicitly worries too much, while the Little Sister seems more concerned with the issue coming back to bite her than the actual event. I wrote it to be as ambiguous as possible, so you could take it in any direction.

>>52939165
No magic from the inside transfers to the outside. If you guys brought a picnic basket with you, you can eat it and be full, but if she summoned a banquet while you can enjoy the taste it will be gone as soon as you leave.

>>52939161
>Honestly, with infinite cosmic level genies, I could probably just wish the Gold Digger downside away.
Remember, Pitfalls > Perks > Powerlevels.
If you wished away the concept of money, you would need to make a return on investment on sheep or whatever barter economy replaces it. That's her thing, return on investment, though on a personal level she would be pissed that gold is gone.
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>>52939263
It is unstoppable. You have given us no methods of stopping them or any knowledge of how they could be stopped.
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>>52939227
But anon, what if the dark truth is that you can't unleash a horrible fate on the world? What if you're actually trapped in hell, only for the revelation to be later used to drive you mad?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8kmu3tkvPiA
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>>52939273
>>52939263
Don't worry about him, he's probably the same guy who got pissed a few months ago at Universal War.
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>>52939263
Honestly, vague threats are worthless. Everyone is going to imagine it as bad as it can possibly be because that's what you've hinted it is, and fear means it'll become so. There's nothing indicating otherwise, so it's an inevitability of the human mind.
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>>52939263
That's why I had the second part in there, if I automatically own everything in existence, how can I gain more?
Also, just thought that the first wish does kinda fit in with GD, since I'm making a return on genies.
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>>52939263
Major shape-shifting is probably too expensive. It costs 5 for major +3 for minor +2 and 2 for grow/shrink making it 12 points the same as being a minor deity. At that point you could take minor deity and just wish your genie had major shape-shifting and wish you had it too.

Maybe just not require grow/shrink for it?
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>>52936977
Why do authors insist on sneaking in bullshit that'll kill you instead of just making a straightforward CYOA?
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>>52939064
>I should likely add a line that she can only do so many things at once though
Don't go limiting the amount of wishes you can have active, just limit the maximum power per wish.
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>>52939189
Broken Facade is like coming across an NPC in a souls game who is wearing familiar armor but speaks with a different voice and ends every sentence with a mysterious laugh. If you don't pick it, there is still some even off in the future, but not like that.

>>52939313
>>52939273
>>52939290
>>52939185
If it's really a problem I'll change the wording.

>>52939244
You're right. I'll have to think of something else.
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>>52939263
>>Honestly, with infinite cosmic level genies, I could probably just wish the Gold Digger downside away.
>Remember, Pitfalls > Perks > Powerlevels.
>If you wished away the concept of money, you would need to make a return on investment on sheep or whatever barter economy replaces it. That's her thing, return on investment, though on a personal level she would be pissed that gold is gone.
Not that poster but gold wouldn't be gone if he wishes money away, just the concept of money/barter would be gone, so she'd have to be pissed about that, not some metal that was still in the earth...hehehe.
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>>52939350
Because it's fun, and allows you to use your imagination?
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>>52936977
Why wouldn't I just throw this thing away and not touch it, with all this sinister implications about how evil it is? Anyone with eyes can see it.
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>>52937737
Who the fuck is Angel?
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>>52939365
>If it's really a problem I'll change the wording.
You've filled the entire CYOA with it, wouldn't you have to change a lot of text?
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>>52939189
It looks like the genie is evil, but picking that drawback makes them reveal they're evil right at the start.
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>>52939344
>At that point you could take minor deity and just wish your genie had major shape-shifting
>Anything covered by a perk cannot be wished for under normal circumstances. If it can be achieved through other means that happen to involve magic, that is fine, but they cannot happen "automatically" as a result of a wish.
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>>52939370
It's fun to imagine dying? Are you that depressed, seriously?
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>>52939365
>You're right. I'll have to think of something else.
No they don't

Glass bottle reduces the cost of the INSIDE realm of the bottle.
Magical medium reduces the power level cost. so Cosmic Power would be 24 not 25 points. Totally different, nigh useless, but totally different.
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>>52939411
If you can only imagine it resulting in your death, I think you might be the one who is depressed.
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>>52939432
I can't really help what the CYOA says here. That part isn't on me.
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>>52939344
The reason it was so expensive is because I didn't want to limit shapeshifting into other magical creatures, but that is potentially so broken that I wanted it to be tough to get. If I reduce the cost, I think I'd have to deal with that in some other way.

>>52939375
>>52939390
>>52939397
What I'm going to end up doing is modifying the Little Sister's final speech to make it clear what is actually happening. The only time the genie themselves is evil and is only pretending to be benign is if you pick Broken Facade, otherwise you'll just have to deal with a serious external problem down the line like >>52938177.
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>>52939370
'surprises' are shit. If you want to make a 'kill anon' CYOA, make it obvious.
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>>52936834
>Peri has patron haint for free but you have to take the hardest interloper and then another but you don't get any points for it
It seems kinda harsh maybe it needs a something extra balance it out? or im i reading it wrong?

If i choose domestic goddess as powerlevel what is the ''maximum'' of what she can do? and how does this rest period work? she has to be resting in the vessel that time each week?

Broken facade is the ''creepy shit'' switch right? i mean if i dont choose it i will not be trapped in some sort of lotus eater machine right?
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>>52936834
>>52936879
>>52936939
>>52936977
>Species
Ifrit

>History
Rebellious Princess

>Attitude
Excited

>Body
Lithe

>Accessories
Cat Ears
Wrist Bangles

>Additional Outfits
Modern
Maid

>Mundane Skills
Housewife
Business Woman

>Vessel Exterior
Gemstone

>Vessel Interior
Single Room

>Powerlevel
Phenomenal Cosmic Power

>Perks
Love Potion
Lust Potion
No Misunderstandings
Guardian Spirit

>Pitfall
Mischevious Mind
Memory Problems
Easily Trapped
Turbulent Mood

>Interlopers
Endless Inlaws
Small Business Owners
Psycho Childhood Friend
Old Friend

FLAT GENIE IS CUTE, CUUUUUUTE!

No but really, the potential behind the PCP Genie is too much so I had to make a build. Ifrit is the only type without drawbacks that would be amazingly detrimental to the genie (a chance of your wish failing or a longer rest time is horrid with a 1month default time). Gemstone means she only needs 3 weeks of rest between wishes. She should make the first three interlopers easy to deal with from her raw power, while I spend my first few wishes on ways to improve myself, or just wish for more Genie Bottles to trap her. Easily Trapped means she will likely get trapped during her Memory Problem periods, letting me largely ignore them. Eventually my curiosity over those and her moodswings would overwhelm me, and I'd make a wish to learn the truth behind the 'Genie' system. In her bottle, which I had previously wished to be protected from all forms of observation, hopefully blocking out the Powers That Be in case they decide to hunt me down for my wish.
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>>52939399
So you wish that you had the power to shapeshift and that you could grant that power to others. Perk bypassed. Or you just keep wishing her into various forms as you desire. Or you just wish she takes on whatever form you want, not under her control. Same thing is accomplished.
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>>52939448
But it doesn't say that you turboautist
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>>52939452
The only thing I know about those anime is that in OMG, Heaven mindraped and castrated the PC.

If that's in your CYOA then it really is a fucking godawful trap.
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>>52939469
It does though, the threat is some insurmountable bullshit.
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>>52939421
The point is they both amount to a flat +1 point bonus.
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>>52939452
>The reason it was so expensive is because I didn't want to limit shapeshifting into other magical creatures, but that is potentially so broken that I wanted it to be tough to get. If I reduce the cost, I think I'd have to deal with that in some other way.
You already limited it in that she can't change into anything more powerful then herself except superficially eg looks and not powers.
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>>52939263
From one author to another, don't feed the autists too much. If there's even a 1% chance that their preferred build could have significant consequences then they'll bitch you out until the end of time.
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>>52939474
>>52939452
>Make waifu CYOA
>Secretly castrate all the people who play it
Hilarious, good job.
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>>52939484
>the threat is some insurmountable bullshit.
>>52939263
>Do you want the enemy to be unstoppable? Because the implication is only that hard with Broken Facade. Otherwise, what your hardships in life will be is completely open to you.
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New thread:
>>52939268
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>>52939460
>It seems kinda harsh maybe it needs a something extra balance it out? or im i reading it wrong?
I felt this too and immediately discounted them as an option. 2 interlopers for no points and the hardest one who's stronger then your genie too boot is way too much to deal with.
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>>52939484
First of all no it doesn't, second of all insurmountable doesn't mean it will kill you
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>>52939517
>Patron Haint of Knowledge
>"Hey Genie where can I get one of those super cool bottles she has?"
>proceed to use uber sealing bottle on her
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>>52936834
>Okay, so. Genie. Got it. Lemme see here...

>Species: I'll just cut to the chase and pick an Ifrit. That pride, that drive, that loyalty? Amazing. And what's the fun in always getting exactly what I want?

>History: I'll go with the Rebellious Princess. Who knows - maybe that imperiousness will rub off on me.

>Attitude: This is an odd selection. Guess I oughta hope for one who's Happy To Be Here and I guess maybe Excited? I dunno. I'm not an expert on this.

>>52936879
>Body: Honestly, let's go with Medium. Not too much, not too little, doesn't draw /too/ much attention.

>Accessories: I guess I'll ask for the Tattoos and the Wrist Bangles.

>Additional Outfits: Modern for letting her blend in, and a Modest one for general use, I guess.

>Mundane Skills: You know? Lemme go with Entertainer and Housewife. I might as well, if this is wish-fulfillment for me.

>Vessel Exterior: Alright, let's have a look. The Ring is convenient, and should fit me well. Besides, I'm well-acquainted with stories about magic rings.

>Vessel Interior: Ah, but here's the rub. I gotta make her comfortable. Single Room is well worth the price. [11]

>Powerlevel: Probably somewhere around Magical Girl. [7]

>>52936939
>Perks: Love Potion [Free], Lust Potion [Free], Magical Realm (Perk) [6], Intoxicating Aroma [3], Minor Psychic Link [Free], Guardian Spirit [Free], No Misunderstandings [2], Cursebane [0]

>Yeah, this works.

>Pitfalls: Mischevious Mind [Mandatory]
She's got her own ideas. Says it's for my sake, but I should've expected this.

>>52936977
Life Goal: Well, I guess Novelty. I'm no hero, so Adventure's not for me, I guess. Still, I'd like to go to some places and see some things nobody else has. Learn something about the past nobody else knows. Et cetera.
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>>52939474
That wasn't the Celestin issue. It's something serious you need to overcome, but that's it. I'll add a speech clarifying it.

>>52939494
Right, but she can transform into any of them, rather than just one.

>>52939497
Thank you for your encouragement. But still, I think some of the feedback in this thread has been really useful, so for now I'm okay with it.
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>>52936939
So do love/lust potion, magical realm and no misunderstanding cost any points?
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>>52939508
That doesn't change what the CYOA says.

>>52939530
>insurmountable doesn't mean it will kill you
Yeah it can just torture you forever instead. Great improvement.
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>>52939553
Additional feedback: The guys talking about Peri does have a point. The massive amount of drawbacks with Marid works since her powerlevel is stupid strong, but the Peri is the middle-of-the-road powerlevel. Maybe make them Domestic Goddesses?
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>>52939497
Nobody is talking about a specific build, though.
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>>52939572
>Unless otherwise noted, Perks cost 1 point, Pitfalls grant 1 point. Oh, and if you got either free by choosing another option, you don't gain or lose any points.
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>>52939576
Or it could be a minor inconvenience. Stop being such a fucking wimp even in imaginary worlds. If you're such a baby just don't play.
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>>52939605
It's just that minor psychic link costs 1, so I figured it was intentional.
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>>52939546
And then you're locked into your Haint being Knowledge which you may not want, though Deity may be able to do it too.
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>>52939589
Build, option, base text, same thing. I haven't read the cyoa yet, I just saw the autist throw his usual bitchfit routine and tried to clue the author in a bit.
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>>52939553
>Right, but she can transform into any of them, rather than just one.
What do you mean just one? She couldn't change before you take that power. You could also bypass it by wishing for an item that already exists that changes people with the deity. Seems too expensive for just shape shifting compared to deity level wish powers. Of course that's just my 2c.

On another note, you should be happy that your very first cyoa has generated so much feedback and that it looks nice! Very well done and hope to see more from you in the future.
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>>52939636
Not really, it's more an issue that the entire CYOA pays you back by killing you in the future.
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>>52939553
I'd actually like to see some more pitfalls and 1 point perks. I have 1 point left over and nothing to spend it on and a 1pt bottle is useless pretty much.

Buying another outfit type, buying another mundane skill, buying a mod to the vessel etc..
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>>52936879
>magic medium
Is this supposed to be an appearance option? I can't tell how it's supposed to look.
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>>52939621
That's my mistake, then. I'll fix that promptly.

>>52939664
Basically, she's better than for example a succubus, because she can be a succubus and a fairy and a witch and a etc. within a moment's notice of each other, while each of those by themselves are just themselves.

But yes, I am very happy. It's just a bit difficult working in all the changes at once.
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>>52937737
who is angel?
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>>52939685
Yes, yes, we get it. You hate OC and think that shitting where you sleep is hillarious. Don't you ever get tired of this?
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>>52936834
Ifrit
Criminal Record
Easily Flustered

Cute
Barefoot
Tanlines

Modern
Chinese Dress

Housewife
Entertainer

Glass Bottle
Cramped
Domestic Goddess (4)

Love Potion
Guardian Angel
Magical Realm (3)
Minor Psychic Link (2)
World Atlas (-1)

Endless Inlaws (0)

Companionship
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>>52939716
Notes and Grids can help you see what areas may need balance against each other.
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>>52939697
Yeah, the Bonus Bottle was intended to deal with leftover points, but I guess it becomes useless when there is just the one point.

>>52939705
She's holding what is essentially a giant wand.
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>>52939733
>You hate OC
Honestly, I think this is a pretty wide spread misconception. These kind of people don't hate the cyoas they endlessly moan about, they are actually completely obsessed by it.
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>>52939751
>holding
>giant wand
You can't really see it though
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>>52939751
>Yeah, the Bonus Bottle was intended to deal with leftover points, but I guess it becomes useless when there is just the one point.
A 1 pt bottle would only really be good for the Endless Relatives if you had a helpful marid as they'd get the top tier power for free so you'd get 3 wishes. and the usual Marid drawbacks. Otherwise you're stuck with the fake genie powered girl for a few point bottle.
>>
It seems like the smartest thing to do is make a burn genie and use her to get extra points for your bonus bottle genie, and release the one with all the traits you gave for points.
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>>52939919
That's why they only transfer over at 75%, though I probably should have tested more to see if that was enough to avoid this exact thing.
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>>52939919
Yeah that was pretty much my wish above. Marid with stuff for 3 wishes, tack on every negative you can live with or won't come into play for points and then dump them all into extra bottle and wish away any negatives from the interlopers you're going to catch or wish for a genie who's perfect for you and wants to be bound by you.

>>52939967
For that matter you could get a marid and buy lots of bottles with only a few points in them, enough for not being misinterpreted and then take the endless family and just keep capturing them for 3 wishes a pop as all their stats are the same. All you need is that they give you your wish in the spirit it was wished.
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>>52939967
I can get 40 points easily, which after the loss is still 30 points, at zero cost, aside from losing the ability to get two genies.
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>>52931940
>The wip got more popular than I expected so now I'm dealing with crippling insecurity
If it makes you feel any better, this is an anonymous imageboard, so even if you do screw it up horribly, there are no consequences, real or virtual.
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>>52939981
You only can get one bonus bottle though it says
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>>52939981
>buy lots of bottles
Bonus Bottles are limit one per customer. If you use Marid to wish for non-perk vessels, A) you'd have to use them to benefit humanity, because of Pure of Heart and B) they'd be perkless Rank:Amateurs because of Three Wish Limit.

>>52939983
Yeah, I'll have to put a limit on that then. Thanks for pointing it out.
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>>52940022
Ah ok, well then that's better, would still give you 6 total wishes though.

>>52939983
How do you get 40 points if you plan on actually using that genie? 14 points from Pitfalls (You don't take mischievous and short circuit) 22 if you don't buy a Marid genie. 3 for bottle/itty bitty vessel choices and 12 if you took every single infiltrator.

14+12+3 = 29 points with a Marid and you'd have to deal with all 4 infiltrators.
22+12+3 = 37 without a marid and a power level of zero, so you'd have to spend some of those points on a powerlevel and would still have to deal with all the infiltrators.

If you took a Rank Amateur then you're not going to be capturing anything useful except the childhood friend and she has her own issues (if you want her for sex). The Jeannie would be unreliable for wishing due to short circuit but may be doable. That would get you 41 points to spend on her. Maybe with that you could wish away the other infiltrators as they'd be based on the Powerless Rank Amateur.
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>>52940275
Jeannie
Bottle +3
amateur +4
Pure Heart +3
Three Wishes +5
Easily Trapped +2
Can't Keep it together +3
Gold Digger +5
Original points +15
For a total of 40
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>>52932211
bullying others, punishments for being caught, ways of not getting caught, sexual things, yuri rape
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>>52936834
Great CYOA but there is anything planned in balancing the Peri? Having to take two interlopers and not get any points out of it kinda outweights greatly the advantages
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>>52934971
>cunt boy
>fictional
Anon I have some bad news for you....
https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sex_reassignment_surgery_(male-to-female)
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>>52935452
>The color green exists
>A blind man sees no colors.
You can argue that wavelengths exist but that in itself is not a color.
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>>52940669
Yeah, colors exist. That is the truth. Just because a man goes blind doesn't mean that color just stops existing.
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>>52940714
By that reason x-ray has a color.
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