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>>47131403
Hard to pick between Anya and Mikome desu. I'd have an easier time if Mikome wasn't so servile but I can't say for sure what I'd do.

>>47131425
Near, Nia and Toko

>>47131436
Bedtime, Playtime and This + That

>>47131451
Booze + Red Box + Blue box
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>>47131403
One day I'll do this, but right now,
>waifu CYOA #782
isn't turning me on.
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>>47131736
Have a space one, then.
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Is that one guy still planning on making an Angelanon inspired cyoa? Have you started on it yet?
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>>47131856
Sadly, space is the only thing that turns me on less than
>waifu CYOA #783

To add insult to injury, I'm feeling demotivated to make CYOAs myself possibly because of lack of other's making OC, but that's a fuccboi excuse. I don't know what would be exciting, that I haven't already made.
"Pick one" CYOAs are boring to make, but "You're a girl" and "you're in high school" is so outplayed.
There is one CYOA I want to do, but I planned to make it a "pick one", but I think it can be a bigger one. Problem is it would originally have multiple settings, but that's hard as shit to do in a bigger CYOA.
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>>47131915
Then tell us what turns you on, dummy! We aren't psychics!
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>>47131936
I'm a sucker for CYOAs with lore, that isn't just "this is Earth, but with demons/monstergirls!111"
One that doesn't center around waifus or companions.
Ordion was fine until he made all the quests for the Orc-faction combat-related.
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>>47131915
I'm not a big fan of space either, but I do try to enrich my favourite setting, which is low or medium magic fantasy.

>possibly because of lack of other's making OC
I am working on Kingdom Diplomacy right now, all it takes is time and effort.
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>>47132143
>low magic fantasy
Conan CYOA when?
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>>47131488
Stats
Destructive Power: A
Speed: C
Range: C
Durability/Staying: C
Precision: C
Developmental Potential/Learning: A
Stand Ability: Aura Absorption
Stand Name: Honeythief
Look: Fabulous as Fuck
Gender: Male
Setting: Average Jo
Miscellaneous: Plot Armor

>Trying to find a song that matches its title let along that and a random superpower.
I did what I could with what I had.
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>>47132164
When you make it.
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>>47131915
Hmm, I've thought about making a CYOA about a setting I made once. The setting is fairly fleshed out with a good bit of lore in a near future earth setup. But I've been afraid folks would think it's too fetishy and stuff because a fetish of mine plays a medium sized roll in it.
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>>47131488
>Stand:

Destructive Power: C -> B (7 points left)
Learning: C -> A (5)
Precision: C -> B(4)
Durability: D -> B (2)
Speed: D -> B (Fin)
Range: E.

Name: Codeine Crazy
Power: Periodic Table Manipulation

Bishi (6)
Average Jo (1)
Sharp Dresser(Fin)

Looks something like pic related.
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>>47132240
>I'm doing it to please my fetish
Well yes, I already am turned off unless it's gentle femdom, in which case no since I plan to do the same.
But it's literally impossible to say if your fetish plays a too big, disruptive role.
If it's a completely fucked up fetish like literal shit, there's nothing you can do to make the cyoa appealing.
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>>47132240
>But I've been afraid folks would think it's too fetishy
You'll have people who hate it because fetish, people who like it because fetish, and people who ignore the fetish and like/hate/ignore it for other reasons.

In other words: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZXsQAXx_ao0
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>>47132240
That probably depends on your fetish, and how predominate it is. I'm sure at least a few people will play it in any case.
What's your fetish anon?
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>>47131425
Amber, Butterscotch, Near, Nia, and Toko
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>>47132392
Oi, I didn't say that.

>>47132662
It's nothing much atleast in my eyes. Just like 1/3 of the world's population aren't normal humans anymore but instead have multiple body parts like four arms (for example) because of genetic mutations.
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>>47133041
Multiple arms sounds handy as fuck. Please make it already.
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>>47133041
but why would that make your dick hard?
Why would a man with four arms cause your third leg to stand?
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>>47133109
Not that anon, but presumably some of those multiple bodyparts would be of a sexual nature.
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>>47131915
>lack of other's making OC
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>>47133109
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>>47133109
Anon, 8 legs.
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>>47133041
Guy, I don't think anybody is going to care about some hindu thousand arm punch masters.
I'd say it's my fetish too, but that has sexual implications. Help a nigga out here?
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>>47133109
You ever been caressed by two people at once, anon? Feels pretty amazing.
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Hi, author of Worm CYOA 5 here.

I've been told that followers I make suck ass.

Any tips on how to make good followers?

Or should I just accept that this isn't my thing and ignore this part in my future CYOAs?
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Since the topic of the moment seems to be fetish CYOAs...

It's one thing to fetishize a game, but how the hell do you gamify a fetish? I'm tinkering with a CYOA at the moment, but I can't actually make progress because of a fundamental problem:

If you are into the theme, then you win at the CYOA, because there are effectively no negative consequences for you. If you aren't into the theme, why the hell are you playing?

With standard CYOAs, wish fulfillment comes with a price. You have only so much of a budget, if any at all, and reaching for more than you were given comes with opposition, limitation, or degradation. Phenomenal Cosmic Power? Itty bitty living space. etc.

When the goal of the game is some kind of degradation, how can I force the player to make choices?

Slut life and its ilk offer great things in return for subjecting yourself to fetishistic conditions, but they have variety of both goodies to get and fetishes to pay for them with. When the fetish is supposed to be the reward, though, what can the player pay with?
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>>47131403
Image Version: https://www.mediafire.com/folder/43r0qdm4sm895/The_End_Approaches

http://www.strawpoll.me/10144367
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Gonna repost the question >>47126421: can Physical Restructuring disguise Super Human Body or Natural Physique?
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>>47133380
The ride will never end.
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>>47133344
This is something I think about a lot when playing the explicitly fetishized CYOAs (Slut Life, Enchante/d/ Rings). Usually what happens is yeah, I take on a huge ton of "drawbacks" which is the stuff I really want and then go spend those points on the bonuses. One thing those two CYOAs did well in particular, in my opinion, was they had a lot of good things for you to spend those points on. They were surprisingly expensive, too. Furthermore, they also had fetish stuff I just wasn't into. This led to a feedback loop that pretty closely resembled actual gameification. I'd load up on the drawbacks I wanted, go to spend those points, and then realize I wanted more. Then I'd have to go back and make a few actual sacrifices one way or another.

Now, this does mean that those who fetishize the "downsides" will end up much more powerful than those who don't. But those who don't most likely aren't playing it anyway. Or they're playing the CYOA but the game they're playing is different. More about which big upside they want and trying to minimize the stuff they don't want. I don't think that's a bad thing necessarily, though. It does mean you should probably come up with something more interesting as a base concept that slutification, though. I'm not sure what else, but the topic seems pretty well covered. I'd certainly be interested in masturbating to/seeing what you come up with.

One other idea I've been tossing around is to put the pricing in the player's hand. Basically ask "If this is an upside for you, pay X. If this is a drawback, gain Y." That does allow powergaming I suppose, but anyone could just break the rules of a CYOA anyway. I'm not sure how serious a flaw that would be.
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>>47133662
any comments to the contrary?
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>>47131425
Amber, Butterscotch, Near, Nia, Rose and Toko

>>47131451
Lustful Daughter, Lustful Daughter, Lustful Daughter, Lustful Daughter, Lustful Daughter and Lustful Daughter
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>>47133511
>base concept
Bit more focused that SL and others: Human livestock. Not the most common kink, I know, and surprisingly difficult to build CYOA mechanics around.

I like your idea of hot/not cost/benefit choice pricing, but I don't know if ill be able to work that gem of an idea into the game
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>>47133837
If the author's still around, just wanted to say that it's pretty good but I like the companions' abilities way, way, way more than the one's that were offered
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>>47131403
>>47131425
>>47131436
>>47131451
>>47131464
this may be legitimately the cringiest thing I've ever seen on this board
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>>47133380
I imagine natural physique can be hidden even under normal circumstances, it leans more towards a wired strength, super human on the other hand could be hidden with some physical restructuring though the person would have to be very cautious. It should also be noted the Traveller leathers are also great for incognito as they've been time tested.

>>47133392
The ride was on long before I was born, and it will carry on long after I die. I am the wild ride incarnate.
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>>47133304
You didn't need to add the "by two people at once" part
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>>47133860
> cringiest thing on this board
> ever

And have you been here long? If not just go to /jp/ and just watch for a bit, it will remove most cringe by overexposure.
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>>47133871
>hiding your hugeness
>not proudly displaying it for the world to see and to emasculate lesser babby men
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>>47133900
Shit dude, I laughed harder than I should.
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>>47133976
Unless your already starting as a manlet and evolve into a square, there's only so much they can do.
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>>47133681
>>47133662
https://1d4chan.org/wiki/Conduit
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>>47134030
So It's Ready then?
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>>47133938
I suppose theirs some of the more extreme questsand the 100% true greentexts, but I think this ones worse.

/jp/ looks identical to /v/ shitposting.
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>>47133860
>>47134107
You're free to fuck off back to /v/.
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>>47134107
I only kind of agree with you due to some of the stuff on the fourth page. Other than that, it's really just a writing prompt for hearwarming romance. I mean, if people are devoting themselves to the characters or something yeah that's weird, but "a nice story" doesn't sound that cringey to me.
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>>47131403
Elizabeth
Toko
Family reunion, Family Gamers

The media loves to talk about how I supported her training full time when Elizabeth was still an up-and-coming fighter, but left work to be a stay-at-home dad when her career started taking off. What the press knows but hasn't really picked up on is that while taking care of Toko I've been working on the next generation of ER training programs, and that our family gaming sessions are a big ingredient to Elizabeth's success. Toko is already looking forward to showing our latest oevre to all her cousins when we host them at our wilderness retreat next summer...
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>>47134107
I personally disagree having sat in some of the most toxic of generals.
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>>47133511
Frankly I'd rather go with nothing than have to take a fetish I hate.
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>>47134361
That why SL and /d/ rings offer a lot of fetishes, and if nothing on offer seems worth it then no goodies for you
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>>47134524
I thought the ring one's fetishes were too narrow actually. It almost exclusively focused on rape and public sex, without a lot of variety outside of that.
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>>47133344
>It's one thing to fetishize a game, but how the hell do you gamify a fetish?
>>47133511
>"If this is an upside for you, pay X. If this is a drawback, gain Y."
I'd suggest keeping the points positive, but granting less points if the chooser is actively into said fetish (which opens the door for gaining points from fetishes you neither like nor hate).

Alternatively, have the fetishes give an increasing amount of points depending on how severely you let them affect you and/or people around you, regardless of how you feel about them.

>>47134563
My sentiments exactly. Not only that, but because someone decided they'd fuck around with removing/wearing the ring to achieve FTL communication or some shit, it got saddled with the long-ass timer before the good bits start working after you wear it / the fetish stuff stops working after you remove it.
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>>47131403
Anya
Toko
Old Couple, This & That, Play Day

Set sail for /adorable rural life/
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>>47134563

I'm >>47134524 and I'd have to agree, but for what it did it offered a lot of different shades if not to many hues, if I'm making any sex.

Still, the idea is the same: if you want some of what is on offer, you have to pay some of the prices.

For this guy:
>>47133337
>>47133814

I don't know how much of SL's approach can help. Your putting only one kink in your CYOA, and it seems like you want it to be more of a reward than a penalty? I can't think of anything to offer that can make it work.

Then again, like you said, with a one-kink game the only people that will play it are the people for whom such things aren't really penalties at all... maybe look up the enchante/d/ rings CYOA and see if you can show different shades of the same kink to give more variety in choices?
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>>47134659
>FTL fetish ring comms

Wait, what? How did that work?
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>>47131915

>Choose something adventurous that nobody has done before and ignore critics
>If that doesn't work, mashup! Maybe you like things about one setting, write them down until you have an incomprehensible long list, read that ocassionally without even trying, eventually mixed idea will come to you.
>You can always share your inner blockage with us, what do you thing about the things you have seen and the like. Half of being jaded is about things you haven't done to stop being jaded.

>Read a good book, it makes the depression go away for a while.
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>>47134755
Something related to the master/slave ring activation/deactivation effects being instantaneous, I think it was.
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>>47133990
that's mean, anon.
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>>47134809
I am confused by your greentext not being in the greentext format. Plus, I haven't a clue what you tried to write.
You saying to combine multiple settings in one cyoa, when the concept was each setting gave you one waifu, so you had to balance both waifu and world?

>Read a good book, it makes the depression go away for a while.
It does not.
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>>47134659
I'd say that something you neither like nor hate is still a drawback, especially since a lot of the times it's thing that require time and effort on your part. Plus most every point-build CYOA (as opposed to Pick 2 styles) has drawbacks that are neutral and you get more or less free points from.

The scaling points thing is kind of interesting, but I'm not sure how often someone would pick something other than the highest or lowest options. Maybe if they're trying to squeeze in the last point or so, if the upsides are carefully priced to not fit easily into the number of points you're likely to get from the downsides.

>>47134563
That was a, uh, pretty huge upside for me since that's what I'm really into. There were also several times that I felt there wasn't enough detail into the various typs of rape and public sex (the Public Property benefit required all sorts of other baggage I wasn't into at all, for example). I can definitely see why that wouldn't appeal to a lot of people, though, both making it an actual downside and giving room for more broad options.

>>47133814
>>47134721
I think human livestock can have quite a lot of depth and breadth, just like any other fairly narrowly-themed CYOA. It really comes down to how much detail you want to put into it. Maybe different owners (either individuals or more corporate entities, or both) and settings instead of a wide variety of specific fetishes.

I don't know what direction you're taking it in specifically but I will voice my frustration that a lot of the time when you have an option to become livestock in the more broad-scope games it combines milking and breeding. And sometimes also "breeding". Your theme has a lot of opportunity to define very specifically what "livestock" means in a lot of different ways.

Sincerely sorry to anyone who doesn't come to this thread for the smut stuff. But this is at least mostly a game mechanics/design discussion.
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>>47134659
You can't do that kind of thing with fetishes, anon. When people hate a thing it's pretty extreme, you'll get bile for forcing people ot be into scat or whatever.

>>47134990
Scaling points are pretty poor for the above reasons.
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>>47134937
Yes it does.

And you can combine anything, not just waifus. Maybe you like one mechanic, location or premise from different cyoas, or books, or vidya, you just accumulate a bunch of data and examine it until an idea pops up instead of trying to come up with an idea first.
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What cyoas do we have that are set in a dark/depressing world? Is there a cyoa with just no hope at all?
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>>47134990
>sorry to anyone who doesn't come to this thread for the smut stuff.
Implying
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>>47135140
All of Liminal Phrenic's.
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>>47131915
>spoiler
It's day 7, and there have been 8 OC this month. How much OC are you expecting there to be to think that others are making OC?
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>>47135011
We'll have to disagree on that.

Why would I want to combine settings when the concept was multiple settings?
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>Dragon King fag again
Someone complained about not being able to choose Mechanical Leviathan, so I fixed that. I also added (hopefully) proper for the Chinese dragons. I also skylocked the Mantas.
>this is only page 1. I'm getting to colors, immortality and aspects after I finish the human abilities here
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>>47135140
There's A Quiet CYOA, but the lore is frustratingly incomplete, and I think the author was in a warzone?

>>47135170
This
Liminal Phrenic's works are kind of like lovecraft lite. You are a bug and there a lot of entities who can squash you even accidentally.

Sometimes you are offered really cool shit, sometimes you are just offered a new life, but almosteverytime there's some kind of cost or implied danger. Pic related is my favorite of his, but I'll post some more lore-heavy ones too.
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>>47135264
Remove the skylock. There is jackshit in the sky. There's nothing up there to do or interact with. It's far too cruel to force people to only be able to go there. You couldn't even store a hoard or anything in the sky.
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>>47135320
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>>47135007
>You can't do that kind of thing with fetishes, anon. When people hate a thing it's pretty extreme, you'll get bile for forcing people ot be into scat or whatever.
I don't see how that applies unless the person hates all the fetishes on offer.

Let's take lactation as an example for tiered points:
>L1 - make enough to become full after a week or so
>L2 - make enough to become full after a day or so
>L3 - make so much you're full after an hour
>L4 - make so much you're constantly at capacity and leaking everywhere

Someone who doesn't hate lactation might take L1 as a given, and maybe L2 if they feel like they need the points.
Someone who generally likes (but doesn't necessarily want to be a milk fountain) lactation would most likely take L2 or L3, but not L4 due to the implied inconvenience.

Thinking of the various tiers gave me a potential answer to >>47133344's question:
>When the fetish is supposed to be the reward, though, what can the player pay with?
You could make the stuff that cost points be stuff that'd make life easier/more convenient than it realistically would be for someone with a relevant fetish (e.g. a top-of-the-line milker for someone with lactation).
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>>47135284
>Jai: Live forever unless someone tries to kill you. 10 Points.
>Lahkshe: You reincarnate forever, you can see the past, you can project your spirit, you can can see things normal humans can't. 1 more point than Jai
Okay wait a minute.
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>>47135336
>>47135320
3/3
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>>47135342
>I don't see how that applies
Because you're not giving them an acceptable amount of points for picking fetishes they like. That was anon's premise.
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>>47132164
It's a WIP? or It's RIP
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>>47127938

"Oh Skeleanon, I love how hard your thrust and how hard I squirt. Fuck me again.…" Femanon says in a dreamy voice as she leans back towards your rib cage. You hear a amazingly loud shuddering moan as the third orgasm racks through her supple body.
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>>47135357
reincarnation has the problem of dying and growing up again. Damned inconvenient, even considering the person you grew up into might not necessarily be the person you died as.
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>>47135181
When I'm making less than 10% of all OC
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>>47135314
But mantas don't have legs or arms. They won't be able to move on land and they're too big to be able to move well in the sea without sinking. They'll be useless unless they're in the sky.
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>>47135473
>Mantas can't swim

Wait, what?
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>>47135473
>Too big for the sea
I don't think you know how buoyancy works. It's not about size, it's about weight. You just need to be lighter than an equal volume of water. Mantas should be fairly light if they're flying in the sky. Plus their body is perfectly designed for swimming.
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>>47133165
>>47133218
>>47133253
>>47133304
These anons get it.

But yeah anyways there are the utility reasons for it, the childhood dreams of "how freaking cool would it be if I had four arms?" reason, and of course as the anons said the lewd reasons of what you can do with them and the multiple part options.
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>>47135491
>>47135502
Well I guess you're right. They won't be able to hibernate, and they don't have limbs, so they can't move on land, and they'd probably be slow swimmers, so I can just undo the skylock.
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>>47135284

That's actually the start of a /quest/ he did long ago. Your on a ruined world at the start of a new Sanuary world.

>Anon does not know how to boil water.
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>>47135378
>Because you're not giving them an acceptable amount of points for picking fetishes they like. That was anon's premise.
Which anon's? I (>>47134659, >>47135342) never mentioned any actual point costs (although I _did_ admonish Enchante/d/ Rings for focusing too much on fetishes I don't like).
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>>47135580
Thanks. Now Mantas aren't doomed to empty, lonely nothingness for eternity.
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5/6
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>>47135605
This one >>47134659
>I'd suggest keeping the points positive, but granting less points if the chooser is actively into said fetish
Is what I'm disagreeing with.
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6/6
Shit, I just realized I forgot to like every one of these.

>>47135546
>>47135565
>>47135584
>>47135604
>>47135616
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>>47135636
Dropped the image
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>>47135643
>We're sorry, the anon you're looking for is unavailable. He has killed himself out of sheer rage. Please hang up and try again.
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>>47135546
>>47135565
>>47135584
>>47135604
>>47135616
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>>47135598
Yeah, I know about the quest. It didn't go over over well. Still, the CYOA that kicked it off is complete in its own right, and I like it the best out of all his works.

>Boiling water
I know what Quietanon was doing, the problem is, the true lore behind the game is inaccessible without QA there to parcel out hints. The game I play of A Quiet CYOA is different than the one QA intended because of this
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>>47135546
this version is a bit more managable
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>>47135753
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>>47135743
He was here about two months ago, so if you're worried about him being dead, don't.
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>>47135781
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>>47135264
Alright, now I need help with the human abilities. Throw ideas at me
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>>47135624
Keeping points positive, or granting less points if you're actively into it?

If the latter, then I don't see what your problem with the tier system (>>47135342) is since I offered it as a _replacement_ (>>47134659, keyword "alternatively"), and it pretty much actively rewards you with points if you go deeper into a fetish.

If the former, you seem to be conflicting yourself or you think people should be punished with point costs for liking fetishes (>>47135378). Or if you're just worrying about the whole "what should people spend points on", see >>47135342 for a potential answer.
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>>47135753
less fun, though.
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>>47135801
these are all pretty cool, so it's a hard pick.
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>>47135342
That's a niece tiered system, I really like it and the way you actually list the values.

Also really like the idea of point costing options for adding some convenience to the fetish. Like if the fetish is huge boobs with varying levels of unrealistic, then some point costing options would be ability to easily find fitting and flattering clothes as well as an option for a nine ease of carrying them around and perkiness.
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>>47135580
If you want, you can add some penalty for trying to crawl around on land with flippers. That makes more sense

Also, if I took manta and hibernation, I would just set a high-altitude course and sleep whilst in flight, like how a shark swims while their sleeping.
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Why hasn't there been a god version of this?
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>>47135928
>I really like it and the way you actually list the values.
Not listing any actual point costs though, just a tier number.
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>>47135580
I think you're underestimating how good a boon not having to sleep is. They can basically outlast every dragon in a fight, are also supermassive and now they can swim too. Is there any downside to being a manta?
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>>47135998
Well should I go back to the skylock or take out the non-hibernation thing then?
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>>47135971
I don't know but you could do it
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Imagine a typical fantasy cyoa where you have to pick a race. Now I want to include an option to ascend into the toptier of your race (lamia->gorgon, dragonborn->pure dragon, fairy->fae king, etc.) How do I do that without making it a must-buy option?
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>>47135998
You won't see a manta pull off a turn tighter than a passenger jet's in sky or sea. If you manage to knock one down into a city or forest there's no easy way for them to get back up again, etc. no fingers in manta form is also a pain.

Sure they get a lot of cool stuff, but I think its balanced with the pains they have to deal with
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>>47135971
Because you haven't made it yet senpai
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>>47135813
A domain or persuasion power.

A phantasm maid/server power.

I mean if your an all powerful and noble dragon at heart, you have to have some way to get yourself some servents.
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>>47136038
The sleep thing. Maybe allow them to remain airborne while sleeping by drifting on currents?
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>>47135264
How does cool down work? Is it only a one way limitation or both way limitation?

That is, can you go from human to (for example) a drake for an hour and then switch back, but only once every week?
Or, after turning into a drake, would you have to stay a drake for a week before turning back?
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>>47136074
Make it expensive, or don't make it a buyable option, just a possible result of an arduous quest after the game begins.
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>>47135971
Anon I know you've been waiting to get your ass ravaged by some horny being but don't you think posting that in the thread is a bit too much?
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>>47136105
So you can stay in whatever form you choose for however long you want, but once you change forms, it takes however long the cooldown time says before you can change again.
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>>47135851
I see the confusion. I'm fine with these tiers.
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>>47135813
>Preservatory
You can't get locked in to either/any of your forms through disuse.
>Duality
You get another entirely separate dragon form, but must take a second immortality method and adhere to both.
>Wizard
You can use your draconic powers in human form. Dragonborn get an increase to all powers instead.
>Sleepless
You never sleep. Duh.
>Progenitor
You can bear/sire children with any creature, and they offspring will gain a portion of your draconic power.

>>47136038
Just let them fly while sleeping or something.
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>>47135971
>get raped
>get turned into a horse and raped
>get raped by a golden shower
This ties in nicely with the above discussion about costing fetishes in a properly gamey way.
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>>47135980
Meant for the fill in a week, in a day. That stuff, normally on lactation themes the author always says how many fl oz per hour which really doesn't mean much to me. How long until full is far easier to use.
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>>47135998
You can't interact with human beings at all.
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>>47136154
I think the human abilities he's looking for are the stuff specific to a breed/size.
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>>47135971
I don't know how to tell you this gently, anon, so I'll just say it plainly.

CYOAs don't spontaneously happen out of nothing. Someone has to make them. So basically, the reason there isn't one is because someone who wants one (you) hasn't made it yet.
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>>47135998
I agree with >>47136085, their form is very limiting as it is.

I guess it's a general consensus to take out the non-hibernation thing, so I took that out. Mantas can hibernate now.
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Takeover WIPs
Page 2 done, not sure where to go from here.

Clearly I need more possible non mob gang members. Probably another half page or page of them. Maybe move them over to a point based system? I'm not sure.

Perhaps just a little bit of a writers block or something.
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>>47135971
Why is Shub-Niggurath so pure and innocent?
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>>47136212
Oops meant to have them be hidden by spoiler images. Oh well.
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>>47135616
>Walk into the middle portal
>It's a locked basement filled with the skeletons of the other people who refused power
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>>47136097
I like the idea of the first power, but you might have to explain the second one to me.
>>47136154
What >>47136186 said
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>>47136074
Think about why you would have to pay to become "Your race, but better". If it's just better than your race, why isn't everyone of your kind ascended? Were the dragons hunted to nigh extermination by the humans/other races and there's still a lot of animosity there? Can there only be one fae king of a specific domain and the common rule is that whichever fairy kills the king becomes the king, therefore people who take that option have to both plan an assassination to get their power and stay wary their whole lives to keep it? The gorgons would be easy, since unlike lamia they're usually treated as exceptionally ugly so they're just a bunch of social outcasts with wings.

Or, you know, don't make it "Your race but better". Maybe there's a natural drawback like the classic "Dragon loves gold, get gold, keep gold, sleep gold, gold only" fixation and that kind of takes up a lot of the dragon's time when they could be flying around doing shit.

But either way, someone's going to figure "this isn't a drawback at all" and take it anyway, so don't worry too much about making it balanced. Just infer that there would be potential problems, both around your kind and others. Or don't, you could do something else. It's your CYOA.
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>>47133380
>we're
Delete this
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>>47136212
>>47136231
You could include some base building?
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>>47131488
Stand: 「SWEET TALKIN’ WOMAN」- ELO
Ability: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Plant_Mimicry
DP: C + 2 (A)
S: D + 1 (C)
R: C +0 (C)
D: D +2 (B)
P: E +1 (D)
DP: C + 2 (A)

Fabulous as Fuck
Average Jo
Sharp Dresser


Quick 「SWEET TALKIN’ WOMAN」, mimic into some dank weed
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>>47135410
That last part is why you've gotta take it with Dama. Not that you'd pass on Dama anyway, given that it provides you with limitless memory that you'll need for your Jai body.
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>>47136373
Oh sure. Room/building expansions would be doable and fit in with the theme. Front stores, dungeons, brothels, armories and the like.
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>>47136242
Like a ghost phantasm you see in vidya games, purple see through. Its a summon you can create that works as your maid or butler, or you can make a few and have a ghostly staff taking care of your estate.
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>>47136423
Wait shit, 「LES FLEURS」 - Minnie Riperton would be a better stand name
Not that anyone cares
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>>47136516
Oh, so like a Familiar? I get you now. Yeah, I'll definitely add that, but maybe as a color power instead of breed specific. I gave the first power to the Fucanlong as Hypnosis.
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>>47136220
>pure and innocent
>one thousand children
She's not just the town bicycle, she's an entire civilization's public transportation system.
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>>47136438
Just because I remember my past lives perfectly dosen't mean that I'll become the same person. Is a personality just in the memories you have, or is it something more? I can't prove it either way, but I don't want to take the risk.

Especially since the Jai body options offers guaranteed indefinite continuation of the self for only one point less. What am I giving up to gain super awareness on top of reincarnation for only one point more? Caveat Emptor, as they say.
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>>47135971
Because we are not gay no, futa is not gay at least not as gay as normal gay
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>>47136566
Dama literally says your mind and soul are fused. So yes, you're getting absolute continuity of self.
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>>47136602
Fucking a shapeshifter is less gay than fucking a futa.
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What do you guys use to make your CYOA?
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>>47136639
Photoshop (or MS Paint if you're cheap)
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>>47136639
Gimp is free photoshop.
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>>47136684
With an obtuse layout.
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>>47136242
>>47136186
Whoops.
In my defense, I have shit reading comprehension.
Some actual ideas:
>One-time (or constant gradual) form change
>Constant awareness of everything in a small radius - bargain bin spider sense and X-ray vision
>Increased X - you can smart/strong/tough/pretty better. Pair it with something more interesting.
>Human Aura - sage dragons are sage humans, lucky dragons can be lucky humans, etc. Make the aura more powerful in dragon form to not get overshadowed by Dragonborn.
>Wild card - pick any other human power, you get it. Either reduce its power or restrict taking Dragonborn's power.
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>>47136698
But its free.
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>>47136698
Oh, also I hate photoshop's undo method. Why cant I just hold control Z for more than 5 steps.
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>>47136608
I think the problem is that we're looking at this CYOA in two different way.

You see a one-point difference and think "ohHO! fool game designer gives me too much power for too little cost!"

I see a one-point difference and think "Hmm okay what's the catch?"

There are too many unknowns with reincarnation, whatever that word means, for me to risk it. That's the entirety of my issue with it. If you think Dama is enough for you, fine by me, but I"m not going to take it

>Jai, Loa, Ir, Eji, Rama, Sithr, Neit
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>>47136807
IF you want to be a rules lawyer, Jai could mean that you die as soon as someone TRIES to kill you. That is, they don't even have to succeed or even hit you at all, just make an attempt.
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>>47136855
>Unless you're killed
I don't read "Until someone tries to kill you". Are you thinking of some other text, or something?
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>>47134057
Try to learn by example how a world is supposed to look.
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>>47136855
I'm not being a rules lawyer. I'm being the opposite of a rules lawyer. I'm assuming the world being described is more complicated than it is presented on the page.

Also, how do you figure that the mere attempt to kill a Jai body is enough to kill it? It says you live until you're killed, I assume that means your foe has to actually kill you.
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>>47136807
No, I just think the specific issue you're concerned about isn't valid. I mean, don't get me wrong, Jai has its perks. Reincarnation means you have to start over every hundred years or less, and go through puberty again and again. That's what the catch is. But Dama + Lahkshe is absolutely another option for true continuity of self, and arguing otherwise when it tells you you have a united body and soul is just disingenuous.
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>>47133662
OH MY FUCKING GOD
PUT IT IN A SINGLE IMAGE YOU DOLT
and while you're at it fix the images next to the perks to look like those in every world
rewrite the perks in less words and have them actually do something
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>>47133380
Highlander displays his name when he responds on here doesn't he?
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>>47135170
>>47135284
Well, there's also the anime-inspired works of Liminal's. Those are generally depressing too, though this is probably the most positive one.
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>>47135813
Maybe the Shenlong can have very minor weather manipulation, such as only being able to cause minor rain or change the temperature by 5' C.
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>>47136922
It dosen't address my concerns of wether memory=personality, I don't know what happens to a mind or a soul between death and reincarnation, and I don't know how I would view a past life post-reincarnation.

Hell, I don't even know how your plan would work even if it does work the way you say it would, which I am not denying is a possibility. Would you wake up in the womb, consumed with autistic impotence since you don't have all the brain cells you need yet? Will you gain full consciousness after birth, unable to talk because your palate is still soft? Will you regain yourself gradually?

I don't know I don't know, I don't know and that is the entirety of my issues with it. My build is the one I am comfortable with because there are less unknowns, that it all.
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>>47136733
Alright, so I gave the wildcard to Wyverns, and the human aura to Drakes. I'm trying to think of where the constant awareness power will fit with which dragon, because I like that one. I don't know about the constant gradual form change or increased X
>>47137029
That's what I was thinking too
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>>47136548
Cool, I'll see if I can't think of any others as the day goes on. How powerful are you looking for on these powers?
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>>47136975
1st. making it a single image wouldn't fit on 4chan. at least, not unless you want it to be a pdf.
2nd. I'm new to Cyoa making, so don't act so surprised I don't know how to fade the Images.
3rd. I've spent a while working on it to this point, so I'm fairly tired of the continuous modifying.
4th. If you have any actual suggestions of powers for the perks feel free to actually say them.
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>>47136212
It bothers me incredibly how the race stats are scrambled in such way that you can't compare them.
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>>47136991
this is the most positive desu
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>>47137064
Thanks for thinking about weather manipulation. By any chance do you need some powers for the colors?
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>>47137147
I guess balanced enough to where it won't be more powerful than any of the colors or dragon abilities. Nothing that will clash with the actual dragon's abilities unless it's inherited from the breed itself, like Hydra's regen powers.
>>47137181
I will give human powers to colors, but after I finish this first page. Suggest me things, I will write them down and save them for later.
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>>47136983
Sorry m8, I prefer not to often. I'll only do it once or twice.

>>47136353
I'll try and fix it.
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>>47135264
Why are there 4 different Long dragons?
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>>47137245
I didn't want to take out the others because I will make the Celestial Bureaucracy an inclusive faction. Only having two kinds of dragon in the Bureaucracy will make it boring.
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>>47137211
Before I suggest some powers for the colors, I have to ask if the colors are the same as the previous dragon cyoa.
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>>47137280
Open paint/photoshop etc, then select the color picker tool. Click the yellow color, then select the bucket tool. Color a white surface or whatever and that will turn the background yellow.
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>>47137285
Earlier, you mentioned that certain dragon colors can also enter the CB. I like that idea, is it still in the works
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>>47137181
>>47137306
That one is actually the first rough draft I made. All those colors stay, but I will add new ones. I got a great suggestion for Orange being a color, but I forgot how the anon explained it to me.
>>47137331
Yeah Golden and Astral can join the Bureaucracy, but I'm still adding new colors while I finish the human powers for the breeds.
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>>47137367
>>47137306
And yes, the original colors won't change one bi
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>>47137388
Either dragon king anon said 'Candlejack' at some point or her just clicked the post button too s
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>>47137314
How do I get that faded parchment look? With all the white inconsistencies.
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>>47137176
Fair enough. I was just trying to save space and just do a thing where everybody can be compared to humans.
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>>47137443
Well great, now you've doomed us a-
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>>47137443
>>47137467
God I hate Candlejack mem
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>>47137367
I was actually the same anon who suggested orange, and I explained it something like this.

The breath attack was just kinetic energy, and had the strength to flip a tank.
They were slightly faster then most dragons.
Their immortality requirements were higher than the others, (if a normal dragon requires $5 million for immortality, an orange one requires $5.5-$6 million).
Was more energetic then the other colors, and as such didn't need to sleep and couldn't take hibernation.

As for what the human power would be with this, maybe remove the need for sleep.
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>>47137367
Brown: allows a dragon to burrow underground, and gain power from being surrounded by earth. Can't fly/weakened by being in the air.

Not all Blue dragons are leviathans and this way not all "Brown" dragons have to be wyrms.
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>>47137527
Thank you, I'll write that down this time
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>>47137566
Good idea
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>>47132164
Is there more to this?
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>>47137527
Is there a weakness to orange dragons?
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>>47137585
Crimson: no breath attack. Instead they have elongated fangs, a paralyzing venom and the ability to drain the blood and lifeforce of their prey. They are also rather strong physically but considered outcasts by most dragons (since they're basically parasites).

I know Crimson looks a lot like Red but I couldn't come up with a better bloodthemed color.
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>>47137752
I love this idea. I was thinking to add a Blood dragon to be able to pair it well with Skeletal/Undead dragons
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Urban fantasy/modern fantasy cyoas.

What is your opinion on them /cyoag/? How would you feel about a large scale one that's also a companion cyoa?
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>>47135264
>can't stop
>won't stop
>pierces the heavens

Manta a best. A BEST.
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>>47137367
How about a dragon that has psionic abilities? Like telekinesis, telepathy, perhaps with claravoiance, psychometry, postdictionl etc. Maybe the psionic equivalent to the scaleless dragon?
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>>47137929
You just want to mindbreak other dragons and ruin this cyoa, don't ya?
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>>47137929
I'll give that to Purple
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>>47137684
Author abandoned it.
Fukken finish it.
Do it.
Dooooo eeeeet.
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>>47137306
I need one more new color
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>>47137280
Does anybody know who the original author is or how I can get in contact with them?
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>>47138003

Nobody does Brown.

Or Emergency Orange.
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>>47138063
I've got Brown and Orange written in already, I also have Purple, Astral and Crimson.
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>>47138078

Peach?

(Beaucratic) Grey?
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>>47138003
I can't think of a colour but I'd like a herbivorous dragon for diversity's sake.
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>>47135971
Because you haven't made it
Because the author isn't gay
Because no one must cater to your fetish
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>>47137961
I just want to be a psychic dragon detective anon.
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>>47138174
Pink
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>>47138003
Also, getting back to the breeds, I need human powers for
>Dragons
>Coatls
>Wyrms
>Tianlong
>Huanlong
>Dragon-Turtles
>Behemoth
>Mantas

>>47138161
I need powers and weaknesses for colors too
>>47138174
All the dragons are omnivorous. I guess it depends on color that will change their diet
>Crimson dragons will be completely carnivorous
>Green dragons will be completely herbivorous
>etc.
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>>47138225
Here's what I've got so far.
>inb4 more Manta complains
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>>47131488

Stand: 「Discovery」-Daft Punk Album

Destructive Power: C->B (7)
Learning: C->A (5)
Precision: D->B (3)
Durability: E-C (1)
Speed: D- C (0)
Range: C

Power: Digital Materialization
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Digital_Materialization

Exactly the Same (7)
Average Jo (2)
Plot Armor (1)
Battle Cry (0)

Pretty much the power of the internet. All I need to do is keep my iPhone or a PC tablet on me. Hell I could get one of those phone watches for flavor. Battle Cry would probably be DATADATADATADATA~DADATA!
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>>47138003
>>47138174
Shaggy/Furred: no breath or even fangs. These herbivorous dragons have two large tusks. Their skin is covered in thick fur instead of scales and they're exceptionally physically strong. Their lacks of scales leaves them somewhat more vulnerable and other dragons don't always accept them to even be dragons.
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>>47138286
Hmm, it could work, but this kind of dragon would probably only be sagacious or masked. It can fight, but if it's vulnerable and not considered a dragon by some other dragons, then it wouldn't be much of an addition for the hero or villain factions
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>>47138250
You should consider a different pic for nagas, a more snakelike one. The current pic is not very clear especially with those strange magic rings.
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>>47137929
My god. Barney the purply dinosaur has never been so terrifying.
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>>47137280
<-
>>47138059
That's me, but I really have to go to bed now, will be back in 6-7 hours.
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>>47137452
Maybe use the select tool to make a segment of the parchment then resize that into something more to your taste?
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>>47138414
I couldn't find a good one, so I settled for that one. I'll look again
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>>47138376
I imagined them as mammoths desu. Flying mammoths I guess. Very big, bulky and strong but ultimately not a predator. Maybe that'd be too big a weakness compared to all those fireblasting, poisontailed dragons though.
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>>47138426
Thanks. Glad to get a reply. Totally new to making CYOA so any tips would be appreciated.
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>>47138479
Yeah, that'd be too much of a liability
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>>47136501
Different guy but maybe have some ability to recruit units for your crew, ie, gang of pirates, peasant mob, army soldiers, prostitutes,etc.
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>>47135264
Behemoth no contest. If you can become a dragon why not go all-out.
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>>47138700
You gotta go through the pains of caring for that body.
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>>47138225
>>47138250
I'm thinking of giving the Coatl some kind of snake like ability
I don't know what I should do for the other ones though
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>>47138798
Wasn't Quetzalcoatl a sun god?
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>>47138933
Yeah, but sun-related powers would be more Gold dragon related
Coatls are flying snake dragons, so I gotta be specific to the type
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>>47138003
Pink! No idea why but Pink.
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>>47138225
How about a ore finding ability in Wyrms, like they can naturally sense when they are near and the general direction of gold ore veins.
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>>47138990
Ok, what does Pink do?
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>>47132224
>>47132378
>>47136423
>>47138280
ITT: Everyone picks Average Jo. Certainly not much of an adventure in this Bizarre Adventure. Unless a Villain arrives who starts targeting everyone who took it.

Stand: 「Sharp Dressed Man」

Destructive Power: A
Speed: C
Range: E
Durability: A
Precision: S
Learning: A

Power: Treachery Inducement
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Treachery_Inducement

Fab as Fuck (7)
Villain (3)
Sharp Dresser (2)
Do you even pose? (1)
Battle Cry: DOKUDOKUDOKUDOKUDOKUDOOOO~ (0)

Though I know how to fight, I find it incredibly droll. Why dirty my suit when I can simply force everyone you know and love to fight you for me?
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>>47138225
Oh also might want to add cold immunity to Levitation.

Dragon-turltes maybe some limited control of plants or the ability to have the biting force of 10 crocodiles?
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>>47139040
Ehh, that seems a little bit useless. I'm talking about something that can enhance their human form
>>47139132
You can add cold immunity with White dragons. They're immortal anyway, I'm sure Leviathan will have a major cold tolerance either way
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>>47138225
Maybe make Coatls exceptionally beautiful and charismatic? You could also give them the hypnosis and let Fucanlongs speak to the dead.

I'm thinking let Tianlongs fly in human form, and Huanglongs just never get tired. Maybe give the classic dragon something related to its color?
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>>47139158
Well just meant that since the depth survival part is in there they should also be able to not freeze to death down in the deep.

Also about the ore ability, if their immortality is based on wealth that would come in really handy if they can lead a gold mining company.

That said another option I can think of is sand kinetic manipulation.
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>>47139232
Giving Coatls hypnosis is a good idea
I like the Tianlong idea, and I'm trying to keep color powers and breed powers seperate, but I can do something about having a weaker form of the Dragon's powers carry over to their human form
>>47139278
True, I can add that then. I like the second idea for Wyrms better, something about being able to manipulate the ground itself, Avatar Last Airbender-style or something
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>>47139090
I was hoping to have more of an "Excellent" or "* Goes to White Castle" Adventure. But looks like you aim to fuck that up.

I thought it was funny how everyone was taking Average Jo and just wanted to take it easy. Also A in Learning, but that's where the fun is.
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>>47139349
>>47139090
I'm not a fighter desu. I just want to stay home and do comfy things with my stand, Senpai.
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>>47139483
I seriously read that as "stay homo and do comfy things with my stand". Maybe my subconscious is telling me you're gay? You should consider it.
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>>47139512
If I make you some lean will you leave me alone?
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>>47139531
Yes.
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>>47139567
The sprite was a lot harder to make than the codeine but here y'are.

Give it a minute to cool, though. Warm lean is bu hao.
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>>47139609
What the fuck is lean?
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>>47139621
Haha these are kinda fun when they're balanced.
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>>47139483
>I just want to stay home and do comfy things with my stand, Senpai.
that feel when your autonomous stand doesn't even know you exist
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>>47139628
Aka "purple drank", lean is a mizture of cold medication and sprite, crushed jolly ranchers optional/
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>>47139628
>lean
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Lean

>current year
>not living like trap rappers
FoH.
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>>47139723
>>47139735
So clearly I'm no doctor but if I was I'd diagnose this as fucking retarded. There's no way that's healthy.
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>>47139752
It's safe-ish as long as you don't mix it with booze or xanax. The issue is that since 10-15%+ of lean drinkers do that...
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>>47139752
Of course it's not healthy, that's why it's only done by stupid teenagers and urbanites.
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Would you kill a young girl so your waifu could enter this world in a vessel? What if you had superpowers to make the killing easier?
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I mean, seeing as I'm the only one who took Plot Armor I guess that means I've the best chance against you in a direct confrontation, and since pretty much everyone would have a better chance at taking you down indirectly I can't complain. If the shoe fits, wear it.
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>>47139910
Hell no, what is wrong with you?
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>>47136895
Those are examples from the second edition, Rorsch is built for the third.
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>>47139910
yes
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>>47139910
Is she effected at all by the girl?
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>>47139910
>>47139974
I didn't think there were too many waifu CYOAs until now. Clearly, we have gone too far
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>>47140013
Nah that anon is just a baddie.
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>>47140013
More like not far enough
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>>47138250

I like the Shenlong for the weather controlling ability
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>>47139918
I >>47132378 do not know how I would be able to defea t>>47139090. How would you do it?
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Would you impregnate a woman with your blessed seed so she would give birth to your perfect waifu? You also stop aging until she catches up.
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>>47140188
yes
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>>47140188
Why not keep the first woman?

Am I engaging in 'wife husbandry' aka grooming?
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>>47140188
This isn't much better. It's mostly weirder.

>Can we do it without rubbers tonight?
>What? Why?
>Well, you see, I need to impregnate you with my sacred spunk so our daughter can grow up into my ideal woman, so then I can bone her.
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>>47140188
>nobody gets hurt
>would get to fuck two women in my life
>incest

Where's the downside? Well the downside is waifu's mom probably not being happy about it. Is this a scenario where we can plausibly explain the magical circumstances that lead to this union?
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>>47140188
Incest is wrong tho Anon. Especially with daughterus.
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>>47139910
Absolutley not without powers and if i had powers then i would probably could just fuck bithces and hope that i would meet my soulmate the normal way i won't

>>47140188
Seems alright, impregnation, waifu and a few decades of a age-free living, what not to love.
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>>47140270
Not when it's magic and she is perfect for you
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Would you allow yourself to be magically impregnated so you could give birth to your perfect waifu? Once again you stop aging until she catches up. Your body completely heals itself after giving birth and gets /fit/ for free.
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>>47138225
>>47138250
I've finished all but three human powers for this page. I still need powers for
>Manta
>Behemoth
>Dragon Turtle

Throw suggestions at me so I can be done with this page already
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>>47140371
YES!!!
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>>47140371
If the birth is painless and you get to stay female, I guess that would be ok.

Pregnant lesbian couple...? Please..?
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>>47140175
>Periodic Table Manipulation
First thing that came to mind was thermite or explosives. You'll obviously need to practice to get the mixtures right on the fly but you could potentially flash melt entire tanks. You're also forgetting that your power includes the ability to freely shape metal. Hell, why not turn the oxygen in their lungs into water? In terms of sheer ability your power is probably the most versatile while mine is the most deadly to stands. http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Aura_Absorption
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I don't even have a reaction image for this, scooby doo or otherwise. What I need you to do is imagine what all_consuming_wtf.png would look like and then imagine that I had attached it to this post. Can you do that for me? I know you can, because it takes a _special_ imagination to come up with this situation.
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>>47140371
Sure why not. Your questions are weird though.
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>>47140407
You don't become female, anon. Having an assbaby is just as painful as a normal pregnancy.
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>>47140444
It's actually worse because your blocked intestines will rupture and you'll die of sepsis.
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>>47139910
No.

>>47140188
No.

>>47140371
No.
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Not exactly a CYOA, but someone made an empire builder for Stellaris (upcoming strategy game) which basically functions like one:
http://stellarisspeciesgen.com/
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>>47140375
Manta = Less tiring, Increased endurance, Lack of need to sleep.
Behemoth = Strength but Tarrasque already has that, Maybe just Durability for Tarrasque and just Strength for Behemoth.
Dragon Turtle = Shell Remains Behind
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>>47140375
Maybe dragon turtle could be life-supporting? Their dragon form can become mobile islands, so giving them something relating to life thriving around them could work. You could also give them some sort of spiritual energy mumbo-jumbo.

Behemoths and Mantas could have some sort of supernatural connection to the world around them. Mantas could hear the currents in the air, and behemoths feel the vibrations in the ground, and both could partially influence those areas to protect them.
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Would you allow yourself to be sexually absorbed into the womb of a goddess so you could be born as the twin brother of your perfect waifu? Your memories will come back slowly as you approach adulthood. Your goddess mom will make sure your life is comfy.
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>>47140375
The dragon turtle could have skin that looks like normal skin, but but can turn into razor sharp scale at will.

For manta's you could have the no sleep ability carry over into human form.

Can't think of anything for behemoth since you used super strength/toughness for the tarrasque.
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>>47140592
The fuck is going on in your head anon? I'm legitimately curious.
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>>47140444
>Having an assbaby is just as painful as a normal pregnancy.

Oh boy do I have a lot to say about that which most of you won't want to read.

Considering I only shit about once a week, sometimes longer, and many shits have actually weighed around ten pounds, I'm happy to hear I can honestly tell women to shut the fuck up when they say I don't understand the pain of childbirth.

Hell, it might actually be more painful for me forcing out a compacted shit than it is for them to push out a baby, at least their vagina dilates to make it easier on them. Nothing stretches out my ass for my weekly metaphorical enactment of the epic Beowulf but the beast itself ripping its way out. I actually have to break it into smaller pieces with a plunger so it will fit through the toilet's drain pipe, and even then I have better odds of winning the lottery than the toilet not getting clogged.


I know, I'm about to receive advice to just shit more often. Do you know how much it hurts to shit with an anal fissure? I have to wait a couple days to heal up, and by that time the urge to go doesn't form until a few days later. When shitting becomes such a horrible event to experience, despite being a necessity to life, you do tend to try to avoid it. Even though you know it only makes things worse.
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>>47140501
>Manta = Less tiring, Increased endurance, Lack of need to sleep.
>Behemoth = Strength but Tarrasque already has that, Maybe just Durability for Tarrasque and just Strength for Behemoth.
>Dragon Turtle = Shell Remains Behind
Sounds super generic.
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>>47140625
Are you me...?

Holy shit.
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>>47140592
Lemme get this straight: You want me to grow up with a girl who I love as my sister, only to slowly begin to realize that such is not the case, but that I undertook unspeakable actions to set in motion a chain of events that would result in boning my ideal woman in a spear counterpart of her own form?

Actually, I'm cool with this. Carry on
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>>47140592
I would, yeah. Twincest sounds p. great.

Could I be trap bf?
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>>47140625
You know that's making the fissure worse, right? You are literally wrecking your own ass.
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>>47140592
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>>47140612
I'm just brainstorming. All of this stuff was super mild though. I'm surprised this is enough to weird people out.
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>>47140625
bones = poop, vagina = asshole. Yup, classic /tg/ level of anatomical understanding alright.
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>>47140700

Yes I do, I touched on that in the last spoilered comment. It's a self-sustaining cycle of "Oh God it hurts and I don't want to do things that hurt even though procrastination is what makes it hurt."
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>>47139621
So is this US vs THEM or are we picking one to protect us from the rest?
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>>47140592
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>>47140706
>kill a child so you can fuck it
>Fuck a girl for the sole purpose of having a daughter to fuck
>ass birth
>Vore and incest
Do you really think this shit is mild?
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>>47140706
> idle daydreaming
>You know what sounds like fun? Murdering some girl so that I can begin the ritual that would allow my imaginary girlfriend to possess her corpse.

Holy fucking christ on a flaming pogo stick, what do you define as EXTREME?
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>>47140592
I would, but unless you're putting these in a fetish CYOA just stop.
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>>47140706
This is a christian image board. How dare you defile this holy sanctuary for believers.
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>>47140707

Are you commenting on how women's hip bones break during childbirth to get even wider and allow easier passage, or how newborns are tiny skeletons wrapped in meat and fat being squeezed out?
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>>47140625
> Ten pound shit
Man you want to see a doctor about that shit.
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Would you be willing to knit together the wombs of 50 young girls you killed to shape a vessel in honour of a dark goddess who will reshape your unholy flesh into a hivemind so you may first give birth to your perfect waifu and then spawn an army of abominations to carve out your kingdom? You gain supernatural powers to complete the murders. Your new unholy body can regenerate from a single cell and is nearly impervious. If you ask her to, the dark goddess will bless your putrid family with ancient technology so you may expand into the stars at your own risk.

I'm at my limits.
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>>47140807
Is your new body female?
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>>47140807
>scifi

Dropped.
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>>47140807
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>>47140807
No, but I'd kill you.
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>>47140807
Nope
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>>47140807
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>>47140807
If they're nearly dead and I just finish the job, does that count?
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>>47140785
>see a doctor

They'd just recommend a change in diet and a bit of exercise like walking or jogging, maybe recommend an enema or very light use of laxatives to start off for a more regular schedule. But if they were any good they'd stress how laxatives aren't something you want to rely on, or you won't be able to go without them. Stool softeners are a safer bet, but still not something you want to take all the time.
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>>47140625
>>47140861
Analfissureanon can shit, he just doesn't want to because of his anal fissure.
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>>47140815
I don't know if paltry concepts like 'gender' or 'sanity' would matter much after the unspeakable atrocities against all that is good and holy you had to commit to reach that point.
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>>47140807
Bitch, I might be.
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Would you be willing to hold hands with a girl who turns out be your perfect waifu? You get a strange fluttery feeling in your stomach whenever you see her. You are both shy but love conquers all. You will adopt at least 1 cute pet together if that is what you want.

THIS IS IT. No more.
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>>47140625
God forbid anyone ever teaches this anon what a laxative is.
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>>47140982
AND JUST WHEN I THOUGHT YOU COULDN'T GET ANY FREAKIER.
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>>47140982
Dude, this is just too much. Please, crawl back into whatever pit you spawned from, for the good of humanity.
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>>47140982
Yes.

I'm a sick bastard.
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>>47140861
>Stool softeners are a safer bet, but still not something you want to take all the time.
Considering the alternative is literally tearing your own ass apart? Yeah, I think you actually _do_ want to take them all the time.
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>>47140604
>>47140501
I switched Tarrasque and Behemoth to where Behemoth has the super strength and Tarrasque is invincible towards human weapons.
It made more sense now that you two pointed it out.
>>47140540
Green dragon's human ability will be healing, so I'd have to go with either the spiritual whatever or the razor skin that >>47140604 mentioned.
I guess I can do something with infinite endurance and Mantas.
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>>47141358
You realize blood poisoning is a thing right?
This can literally kill you.

See a fucking doctor. Better yet, go to the fucking hospital.
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>>47137064
Maybe wurms, and fluff it as tremorsemse?
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>>47141390
I gave Wyrms their human ability already, I'm working on Dragon Turtle and Manta
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>>47140982
Can the pet be a cat girl?
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>>47141409
Manta: kinda sorta floating, can't go more than a liesurely pace or a few feet up. Good for jumping fences, though.
Dragon Turtle: crazy good hearing. Can hear all movement in a few feet, and can echolocate a ways beyond that.
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>>47141601
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>>47131488
"Pay No Mind"
Attention Manipulation
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Attention_Manipulation

Destructive Power
-c
Speed
-d
Range
-b
Durability/staying
-c
Precision
-a
Learning
-a

Fab as fuck
Brojo
Sharp Dresser
Do you even pose?
Plot armor x2
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>>47141619
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>>47139090
I know, right?
Minor Villain plus like two Plot Armors is just as safe if you just go around pranking random people (but making it up to them if they get hurt), and you could still end up joining the Jo group.
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>>47139621
If this is a pick one to protect you and the rest try to kill you, I feel like Grievous is the best option. 2 lightsabers and 4 arms is easily enough to handle the rest. Terminator might cause some trouble and Predator would be tricky with his invis, but otherwise I'm good.
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>>47141646
I'll post the results for the mysteries section tomorrow. Hopefully it won't set off a shitstorm since it's just mysteries you're investigating and there's no chance of anybody's waifu secretly having a dick.
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>>47141687
That's what I have done. It's my first CYOA, so let me know if I've fucked anything up. I'm planning on adding another page where you can choose friends/enemies from around the academy, but it will be a while since shifting through a million generic schoolboy images looking for something interesting to use for characters is boring.
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>>47131488
Welp, the only interesting abilities that showed up in my free 10 rolls were Belief Vocifer, Angel Soul, & Holy Fire Manipulation.
Vocifer & Soul were hella OP though, so Holy Fire it is.

Stand: Shepherd of Fire

Destructive Power: A
Speed: D
Range: B
Durability: B
Precision: D
Learning: A

Power: Holy Fire Manipulation
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Holy_Fire_Manipulation

Fab as Fuck -1
BroJo -3
Do you even pose? -4
2x Plot Armour -6
Battle Cry: GAHEHEHEHEYAAAAA~ -7

Gonna have to go full mad priest on this one, it's gonna be fun.

AMEN
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>>47141601
>Random fetish nonsense where all girls get raped by the other students or tentacles and such.
Look, either make a serious CYOA, or a fetish CYOA. Don't try to cross the streams, or people are going to call out your shitty logic.

>>47141687
Nobody is gonna want a waifu from this school anyway since all the girls are apparently cocksleeves for any and everything that stumbles through.
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>>47140625
Might I suggest seeing a doctor about getting booked in for a, say, weekly/twice-weekly colonic until your anal fissure is fully healed? Or just finding out if there's any clinics nearby that'll do one and talking to one of their doctors about this?

It'll at least be easier on you than not shitting but once a week.

I have to say, I have some experience with this predicament. I'm kind of into anal play, and it's easier to do that, when you're squeamish about dealing about shit, when you're, shall we say, "appropriately clean?" Problem is, it causes a certain level of backup, of the variety that leads to pushing out things the size of your entire forearm into the toilet.
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>>47141832
Rapture Academy is actually a port of an existing RPG, aiming at erotic horror. Nor every fetish CYOA needs to be a happy snu-snu fest.
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>>47141892
That RPG sounds terrible.
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>>47141904
Okay. Don't play it, I guess?
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>>47141621
>>47141731
BROJOS UNITE
At any rate, we need an actual JoJo to show up.
A BroJo with no JoJo is a NoNo.
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>>47141601 >>47141619 >>47141646 >>47141687 >>47141725
Should've waited until the next thread to have post this.
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>>47141970
Nah, it's fine. Nobody's going to build for it anyway.
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>>47133858
>>47133837
>>47133883
I don't get the last mission
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>>47133837
Party Tricks, sleepless
>>47133858
Contacts and Shades
Compound
Tactician
Outsider, shaman, and mist
>>47133883
Rival group
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>>47141964
Senpai noticed me!
Just as intended, good to know these powers are working after all.
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>>47141970
Go ahead and post again in the new thread. No rule against it, after all, and It'll get Your CYOA the exposure it deserves.

>>47141990
Eat shit.
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>>47141601
I get that boys get preferential treatment but is there anything preventing me, a boy, from making other boys my bitches?
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>>47141687
>Make your choices before looking at the secret page to see your investigations results
>No secret page
The denial is making me go wild
fuck no stop this
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>>47142241
Doesn't seem like there is I mean they have no enemies really and all the mysteries are for girls so eh
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>>47142241
Nope, but the boys will actually be able to turn to the teachers or the wider student body for help, so make sure you can get away with it before you try.
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>>47142334
So basically I have to break them before they can go look for help or can a boy ask for help on behalf of a friend?

This multiversal boarding school is surprisingly straight. I guess the challenge only adds to the fun.
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>>47141621
>>47141731
Fine, if you insist.
「The Broken」
Flaw Enhancement
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Flaw_Enhancement
Destructive power:C
Speed:B
Range:B
Durability:A
Precision:C
Learning:C

Ripped 6(We can't all be ladymen)
Jojo 3
Sharp Dresser 2
Do you even pose 1 (Mandatory)
Battle Cry 0(Also mandatory)
Obligatory JoJo Created, and I basically have debuffs. This is fine. Let's go.
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>>47141601
This is one of the darker and more uncomfortable CYOAs I've read. I kind of agree with >>47141832, framing the fetish content in a "realistic" context is super dissonant at times, and really stretches the logic.

I get that your trying for erotic horror, but it's so absurd that it instead switches between disturbing and comedic.

As for more mechanical criticism: Allure and Threat both seem to do the same thing, just with a different coat of paint. This leads to strange paradoxes, like a character with Allure 0 and Threat 6 who's demands for sex will simultaneously accepted and denied. That said, Schrödinger's fuck would almost be in theme for this CYOA.

This is also somewhat true with the dark fates. The differences between capitulation and slavery are minor, as are the differences between bimbofication, controlled, and stockholm syndrome. They're all basically the same, with only minor differences. The fact that other fates such as Betrayal and Spirited Away are actually quite distinct by contrast only highlights this.

You also misspelled "committee."
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>>47141601
>House
House Medusa
>Enemy
House Mars

>Attrrbutes
Allure 3
Elusive 3
Force 1
Study 3
Threat 2

>Perks
Favorite Class:
Magic, Law, Theology

Inhuman:
Inhuman Lust, Vampiric (sexual energy) Monster (-2)

Magical:
Magical Training, Pact (-3)

Social:
Authority (Teacher), Celebrity, Connections, , Guardian, Reputation (-2), Responsibility (-2)

Sensual:
Dream Girl, Modified Body (-5), Nymphomania (-2), Compulsive Masturbation (-3)

Spells: Change Shape, Blast, Summon, Supernatural Sight

>Mystery
Magical Girl

>Enemies/Dark Fate (Just going to choose because I'm not sure how to roll for this...)
Rape Club, Sex Work

Who better to teach Theology and help mentor members of House Medusa than a Succubus? Or, more accurately, a former human who sold herself to a powerful demon in exchange for such a body, and the power that goes with it.

She's fairly well known and popular around the school - and has a reputation for being easy pickings for any boy who's "hot for teacher." It doesn't help that her Pact Patron remade her to be a nymphomaniac who's aroused by almost anything... but, then again, it means it's pretty hard to rape her, since she'll enjoy just about anything you do to her. Plus, her Patron has enough sway to rescue her... eventually. He likes to let things go long enough to be entertaining (for both of them...)
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>>47142448
Either break them or have some kind of blackmail material that they wouldn't be willing to go to the teachers about. Then it's just down to whether or not anyone cares about him enough to cross you to help him, based on your respective social statuses. If it's some nerd from Vulcan, not many will care. If you want to break a guy from the football team, his Mars bros will probably try to beat the shit out of you. It's best to be as popular and powerful as you can before turning on the other guys.
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>>47141904
Also wasn't Rapture Academy (the RPG) something that /tg/ itself made a long time ago?
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>>47142638
>darker and more uncomfortable
>disturbing
>comedic.
Am I missing something?
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>>47142682
/tg/ has made some real retarded shit before, to be honest.

>>47142684
He means the attempt at making this 'serious' actually just make it come across as stupid.
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>>47141892
Link to it?
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>>47142552
So we have debuffs, a bruiser and a distraction. Seems like a balanced enough party. Now, who's the main villain?
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>>47142638
Fair enough. I was hoping from something involving sex that could involve an actual plot instead of pure jerk-off material, but I guess that's a poor mix.

Allure is supposed to be represent people being attracted to you, while Threat your ability to browbeat people into obeying you. If you have Allure 0 and Threat 6, they'll obey you out of fear, but they won't actually want you.
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>>47142684
>Am I missing something?
I don't think so? Are you?
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>>47141601
>SJWs are right the CYOA
Fuck it why not. I'll need to finish reading this wall of text first though.
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>>47142638
you see, this is how you do criticism. You can think something's bad, but be more like this guy, who explains why he thinks so instead of reducing his opinion to some hind of sound bite. on a text board.
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>>47142717
The site I read it off of went defunct a while ago, but I've been able to salvage a version via wayback:

http://web.archive.org/web/20080420173947/http://markovia.com/index.php?title=Rapture_Academy
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>>47142684
It's like a Donut Steel. It tries so hard, but it just makes me roll my eyes.
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>>47142726
Part of the problem is that the setup, all girls are powerless rapebait, does not appeal to someone who wants a serious story. You're either in this because you like the idea of being a helpless sex toy, in which case you don't care about any story, or you're not, in which case the danger and worthlessness of being a female here doesn't appeal at all despite them having all the story hooks, so you either go male (and thus have no story hooks and be TRAINED to rape, which means no story anyway), or you simply do not do the CYOA.
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>>47142723
Well, it's meant to be >>47139090
But the range limitation seems a bit off to me, it seems like people should be able to think for themselves again after leaving their range maybe needing a few words/a swift smack to get back to thinking right. And considering his range is 7 whole feet, it seems kind of underwhelming.
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>>47142726
I think it's awesome you managed to change that whole RPG into a CYOA, full props to you anon.
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>>47142827
Empty praise.
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>>47142807
TL;DR version
>Story is incompatible with smut, you shouldn't even try
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>>47141601
This angers me, I'm fine with your weird rape fantasy bullshit, but at least give a few good options for those of us who want to be good people.
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>>47142723

>Main villain

Il est moi, mon ami.

C Destructive Power (8)
A Speed (6)
C Range (4)
C Durability (3)
C Precision (2)
A Learning (0)

Power: Magic Creation
>http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Magic_Creation

Fabulous as Fuck (6)

Gender Swap (5)

Villain (1)

Battle Cry (0)

>doooWOOOO! doooWOOO! (minor fifth, if I recall correctly?)
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>>47142833
>How dare you like something I don't.
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>>47142834
Story is compatible with smut. Stories of helplessness and sexual exploitation are not compatible with a format based upon your choices, however. It's just this specific framing that doesn't work, not the idea of story and sex.
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>>47142833
How so? I legitimately think this is a nice CYOA and am legitimately impressed he managed to do what he did.
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>>47142850
Ah, shit. Didn't add villain boosts to stats.

B in Destructive Power, Durability, and Precision.
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>>47142854
>>47142866
It's more that you didn't bother highlighting anything you liked, you just saw people laying out criticism and said "good job"
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>>47142857
I can accept your opinion in this format, even if I do not agree with it.
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>>47142807
I was hoping to get across that the idea is to avoid being rapebait by selling out other girls and/or by trying to fight back like Themis does. Hopefully the results for the mysteries page will reinforce that, since most of the opportunities are along that vein, though by then they'll have had to read to whole thing to get that far anyway, which they probably wouldn't if the start of the CYOA doesn't appeal to them.
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>>47142881
No, as usual anon you are mistaken, I have actually read the RPG in the past and was there when this guy said he was working on this CYOA and have been waiting for him to finish it. Please try and again some other time to be judgemental.
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>>47142850
>>47142879

AAAAHG! AND THE NAME!

Kveikur.

Curse my forgetful ass!
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>>47142808
Thats the range of his stand itself, I think the range of its power is decided by precision?
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>>47142882
Well anon, just look at the builds so far. You have a couple questions about raping other boys and a someone being a sexy succubus who just goes whole hog on the sex, light on the story.

>>47142900
Two problems are, it's so everpresent you don't present any realistic expectations of avoiding it. There's too much exploitation for you to be able to claim it didn't happen to you. For two, there's zero advantage to going female. There's no boon to it instead of going male. For three, this whole format is based on choice, and thus you are CHOOSING to put yourself into a situation of assured sex abuse. That only appeals to people who like the idea of getting sexually abused, not the people who want to avoid it.
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>>47142840
Themis and Neptune are stereotypical designated Good Guys. At least one of the mysteries is about a magic chalice that lets you heal people. What more do you want?
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>>47142931
You can't heal being raped, anon. Those microchimeric cells and mental scars are yours forever.
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>>47142726
>Fair enough. I was hoping from something involving sex that could involve an actual plot instead of pure jerk-off material, but I guess that's a poor mix.
For pure jerk-off material, it's probably fine. The setting is just another fetish element, just like the horror and BDSM aspects.

As a springboard for an actual plot, it's honestly quite lacking. Too many parts either don't make much sense, or don't hold up to scrutiny, and everything is just too conveniently set up to cater to it's fetishes.

Again, as just a sex thing it's not really a problem. But it's so blatant about being a sex thing, that no other approach can work.

>Allure is supposed to be represent people being attracted to you, while Threat your ability to browbeat people into obeying you. If you have Allure 0 and Threat 6, they'll obey you out of fear, but they won't actually want you.
That's fine, but make sure mention that in the CYOA itself. As it's written now, the paradox exists.
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>>47142900
typo on house Diana "sports start" should be sports star.
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>>47142746
>you see, this is how you do criticism. You can think something's bad, but be more like this guy, who explains why he thinks so instead of reducing his opinion to some hind of sound bite. on a text board.
Holy shit, I think this is the highest compliment I ever received on 4chan.
Probably the only time, too.
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>>47142259
sauce on that pic amigo?
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>>47142921
Range - Measures the Stand's range of manifestation, range of ability influence, and spatial mobility.
A= 328 feet
B= 164 feet
C= 66 feet
D= 33 feet
E= 7 feet
That "Range of ability influence" is fairly damning"

Although, that magic creation guy seems to be a bigger issue/OP as fuck
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>>47131488
Stand: 「I FOUGHT THE LAW」- The Clash
Ability: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Law_Creation

Destructive Power: B
Learning: B
Precision: C
Durability: C
Speed: B
Range: A

Fabulous As Fuck
Female
Minor Villain
Sharp Dresser
Plot Armor X3

I just want to be Yukako, basically - I get to be a villain for a while, then I get my ass kicked and become friends with everyone afterwards,
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>>47142987
>>47142850
Jesus, the average powerlevel went up a bit with the creation abilities.
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Someone make a new thread? This one's about to die.
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Okay, say you had to send a girl to a magical rape boarding school, but she gives birth to a new /cyoag/ thread...
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>>47142931
>Neptune
>Good guys
Anon what? They're completely toothless. The setup is "All the goodboys go here where we lie to them and make them into sheep who don't suspect all the rape and rapedemons.", they don't have any awareness or offensive power in relation to this, they're all patsies.
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>>47143073
These threads aren't worth it. They aren't worth anything. I wouldn't trade this breadstick for a new thread.
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>>47143077
I agree with you, but it is also a power fantasy game. A main character is going to break the mold one way or the other, it's up to you to decide whether you're saving or raping.
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>>47143096
>Implying you're the main character.
>Implying you're not the rapist villain, a worthless rape victim, or a retarded Neptune patsy who is that guy that gets NTR'd in a doujin.
Also I was specifically countering what that anon said about them being 'good guys'. They're not. They're just the sheep.
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>>47143089
Some people either leave a group or attempt to reform it, but I suppose bitching about things as they are is also a valid choice.
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>>47143118
>worthless rape victim
That's the main character in MY doujins, thankyouverymuch.

But yeah, they do suck. But if you're making your character in your version of the school, what's actually stopping you from being the main character? I thought that was literally the point of the vast majority of these things.
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>>47143136
Anon presented a scenario, and I answered it.
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>>47143139
Why would you bother with this CYOA, frankly? Not unless you get off on being a rapeslave or a rapist.

And it depends on the CYOA. This one doesn't give any meaningful agency to create an MC status.
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>>47143118
If we were the MC, there would be an option to unite the less horrible houses into a fuck huge insurrection and slaughter the rest, preferably with fire and shotguns. Until I get my rebellion good ending, there is no good guy option in this damn CYOA.
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>>47143139
He's butt mad anon. It doesn't matter what you say to them, or who's right at this point..
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>>47143170
Pretty much. Themis are useless fuckups and Neptune are retarded sheep.

As for the less horrible houses, man, you're going to have to kill off 90% of the men straight off. And 70% of the girls.
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>>47143153
My impression is that most cyoas don't actually cover much past the character creation, which this one has ready. There's also the investigation aspect left tantalizingly unfinished. You make the character then write/imaging/jack off to your character's adventures. It's a creative tool.

>Not unless you get off on being a rapeslave or a rapist.
That really is the extent of my interest in it. It is a flawed and narrow game, I am in agreement with you there. I'm just contesting the "main character" argument.
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>>47143096
You can't save them. One guy from Neptune can't change the traditions of the 9 other houses or stop the actions of a bunch of monsters, necronomicon-wielding rapewizards, mad scientists, etc. It is also made very clear that the richest and most powerful guys in the multiverse send their sons there to become rapists. You can't beat them. It's impossible.
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>>47143171
Anon please, this isn't how to react to opinions you don't like.

>>47143193
Eh, usually the CYOA give some meaningful character hooks you know? "There's an apocalypse you need to stop!" or they give you the power to change things, this one doesn't really have either. This place is a crapsack, has always been a crapsack, and you don't really have any realistic way to change that.
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>>47142900
>I was hoping to get across that the idea is to avoid being rapebait by selling out other girls and/or by trying to fight back like Themis does.
As it is, the deck is stacked so greatly against woman (and, to a lesser extend, would be heroic men) that defeat seems almost a foregone conclusion.

As I see it, there are two main appeals for choosing to be a female in the CYOA, since being a male is the mechanically stronger option: because you actually want to indulge in the fetish of it (like with >>47142655's character) or because you want to fight back.

But as it is, fighting back is flatly impossible. you can't actually do that. The best you can hope for is just to survive.

This is part of why the CYOA is fine as a fetish thing but bad as a story thing. There's really only one story you can tell.
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>>47143218
>implying I care one way or the other about one more poorly designed cyoa
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>>47143239
Then why infringe on our debate, anon? We're having a lively discussion.
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>>47143218
>>47143222
I (mildly) disagree with the notion that something is only worthwhile if victory is assured, or even possible. It's a grim story. There can be catharsis in that, though.
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>>47143266
Seconded.
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>>47143266
Not really from a self-insertion angle, though. That's the thing. The format puts you into the story, and suddenly it's a lot less fun if the rape victim is you, unless that's your fetish.
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>>47143182
That would be the fucking plan, with as much ridiculous violence as we could muster.
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>>47143286
>why would anybody play a fetish game unless they were into the fetish? You really should make your fetish game appeal to people that don't share that fetish.
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>>47143256
Do you think this is going to end in any way but shit flinging?
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>>47143323
The creator himself has said he wanted to get across the idea was to avoid being raped. He's clearly failed, and your defense doesn't help
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>>47143324
It's page 11, so yes. Even if it does become shitflinging, who cares? It'll last five minutes.
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>>47143355
If you think it's pointless and will only last five minutes, then why do you bother typing at all?
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>>47143377
Discussion isn't pointless, but getting so worked up that there might be shitposts five minutes before we fall off that you shitpost in turn, is pretty silly of you.
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If a person is determined to fling shit, then shit will be flung.
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>>47143389
>no i'm right
>no me
This holds meaning to you?
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>>47143414
If a dog is determined to steal your dinner, he'll manage.
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>>47143266
Yeah, but part of the point of a self-insert story is to shape it as you want with your actions. As it is now, unless the powers section gets revamped to give the edge to fight of an entire multiverses' worth of serial rapists, psychotic monster, and the worst dregs of humanity with several fates worse than death as the only options detailed or even mentioned, the people who want to play the hero (like me) are left here pissed off with nothing to show for it other than degrading the author. If being a rapist/rape victim is what gets you there, fine, who the fuck cares. But if you want to tell a serious story about this terrible shit, you need to give us the chance to try and make it better. Preferably with a massive war.
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>>47143432
At least as far as CYOA go. You can have a book or whatever that's just misery and death (though people get tired of that quick if there's no hope to break it up), but CYOA doesn't work well for it.
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>>47143421
He can try, but won't necessarily make it. That's the difference.
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>>47143465
Oh believe me, that wily mutt knows how to get the job done.
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>>47143472
Doesn't matter, it's still a matter of trying. Shitlinging doesn't involve a try, it's just a random post by one person regardless of its effect.
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>>47143501
>Implying he doesn't embody the metaphysical concept of success
What kind of silly dog do you have?
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>>47143472
Dogs are pretty bad, sure. Peacocks are much worse. Trust me. My six-year-old self knows what's up.

I'll get that motherfucking bird one of these days.
Bastard took my french fry.
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>>47143096
>I agree with you, but it is also a power fantasy game. A main character is going to break the mold one way or the other, it's up to you to decide whether you're saving or raping.
There's really no believable way of doing that. The powerlevel of a student is so far beneath that of an average threats, and the underlying problem of the school is so intrinsic to the setting, that no single student, main character or not, can reasonable expect to win.

Like, the most believable victory condition I can imagine would be some Slavoj Žižek-esque revolution, where the player inspires the community of students to do the morally righteous thing and tear down the system.

Against, that's the _most believable_ victory condition I can think up.

My suggestion is to either:

A) Establish that while the player has 10 attribute points and 10 perk points, that other characters, students and teachers alike, actually have much less. Or, alternatively, while everyone else has 10 of each, the player actually has a higher number.

B) Give the player a benefit not available to other students or faculty, some other bonus to give them an edge.

You could even do a kind of a "select your difficult" thing, were people who want to play as rape bait (or want to fight against impossible odds) can choose to have the typical number of stats or forgo the bonus.

In summary, as it is now, the average student can not hope to triumph against the threats against them. So, make it clear that the player is not the average student. Make it clear that you actually are the main character.
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>>47131488
Destructive Power - C
Speed - A
Range - D
Durability - A
Precision - D
Developmental - A

The Good Doctor
Organic Manipulation
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Organic_Manipulation

Ripped
Minor Villain
Do you Even Pose?
Plot Armor
Sharp Dresser
Animal Mascot

Destructive Power - A
Speed - C
Range - B
Durability - D
Precision - C
Developmental - D

Ride The Lightning
http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Maser_Breath

I guess could I have my ass beaten with my pet and join the heroes to beat not DIO.
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>>47143513
What a flamboyant thief.
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>>47143511
A dog that's sometimes a dumbass and sometimes disturbing.
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>>47143516
This might actually be the only way to capture the leveling mechanics of an RPG in a CYOA format
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>>47143170
>If we were the MC, there would be an option to unite the less horrible houses into a fuck huge insurrection and slaughter the rest, preferably with fire and shotguns. Until I get my rebellion good ending, there is no good guy option in this damn CYOA.

>>47143516
>Like, the most believable victory condition I can imagine would be some Slavoj Žižek-esque revolution, where the player inspires the community of students to do the morally righteous thing and tear down the system.

It is comforting to know that I can always find comrades on /tg/.
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New Thread.
>>47143685
>>47143685
>>47143685
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>>47131488
Stats
Destructive Power: a
Speed: B
Range: A
Durability/Staying: D
Precision: E
Developmental Potential/Learning: A
Stand Name: Under My Thumb
Power: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Ambient_Resource_Construction
Look: Fabulous as Fuck
Gender: Female
Setting: JoJo
Miscellaneous:
Sharp Dresser
Do you Even Pose
Battlecry "Incoherent Screaming Noises"
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>>47139090
As the only one who took JoJo I guess we're having a Bishy fight?
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