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My Little Progress : Technology Isn't Magic - Thread 25

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Twilight: I can't really believe your story Anon, buildings with over 100 levels? Flying boats bigger than Ponyville? And yet there's no magic in your world? Please.
>Growing tired of Twilight's berating, you go out into the world to prove her wrong.

That's the prompt that started it all. So what is thread about? It's about Anon bring human science and inventions to Equestria and a disbelieving Twilight.

Thread Story List.
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Here we go again.

The ride must go on!
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>Anon insists that physics and chemistry work the exact same way in equestria as on earth.

>Is proven wrong when it is displayed that many transition metals are extremely unstable.

>Anon owns a centuries-old coin collection from across the world.

>Anon is arrested for plotting terror and/or treason when ponies find out he's been storing several thousand megatons TNT's worth of nickel, copper, and zinc in his basement.
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>>27434779

>Tries convincing ponies that the Moon orbits the Earth, and the Earth orbits the Sun
>Turns out the Discord fucked up the entire solar system and Celestia and Luna are trying to keep it all together
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>>27435430
Discord is indicted and executed for breaking the law of gravity
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>>27435430
Hell, do we even know if that world is even a planet, rather than a flat plane with undefined boundaries? We already know MLP cosmology doesn't function in any way like ours given that both day and night sky can be in the same place at once, what's to say the sun and the moon aren't literally summoned and unsummoned?
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>>27435654

I wouldn't be surprised with the magical nature of the world.
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>>27435654
>both day and night sky can be in the same place at once

Um.... both day and night sky ARE in the same place, you just cant see the stars due to refraction
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>>27435884
Yeah, in Equestria they can be side by side, refraction be damned.
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So, I was a massive retard and posted green right as the last thread was dying. Paste is http://pastebin.com/bnVFCnPw if anyone prefers that over going back. I'm also putting some of my comments in it since I think they're important for clarity.

>>27435488
Thanks for catching that, I'll change it for the paste.
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>>27436138
>I was a massive retard and posted green right as the last thread was dying.
>Implying that s not actually part of your master plan to do it on all the threads since 2 or 3 threads ago
You cant fool me f@m
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You guys want a prompt? Too bad. I'm posting one anyway.

>You are Anon
>You are an Astronaut, working on the International Space Station.
>For X reason(s), the whole station and you are teleported into orbit above Equestria
>The orbit is rapidly decaying.
>You do Y to survive reentry.
>You land in or near the Everfree forest.
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>>27437018
>you are Anon
>for X reasons you do Y
>Press Z to make it stop.
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>>27437018
>You do Y to survive reentry
Durak, you are not doing of Y.
You are hauling of your ass to glorious Soyuz and be there hell out of.
ISS is not for reentry. Soyuz is.
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>>27437137
>ISS is not for reentry. Soyuz is.
And guess where glorious Soyuz happens to be docked at all times.
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>>27437154
These need pony pun names before we continue. Get on it.
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>>27437171
Being a human invention, they don't really need horse puns, but that would improve the story.
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>>27428505
>>27434779
"derpy, I have no idea how you could possibl-"
>suddenly, a man appears through the portal, with a Russian built rifle over his shoulder.
>he looks around the tile 1970s esque kitchen, perches down in a startled stance, and without even noticing derpy he speaks.
>"am I in earth!?"
"no- uh- this is equestria. I'm sorry you had to end up in this place- this place is unlike earth-"
>you're speaking with broken thoughts.
>"oh… so, I must've tele--- wooohaohay! Your human, I'm supposed to be the only human!"
>he eases himself, and looks down.
>calmly, he speaks.
>"oh, hey mailmare."
>DP "hiya anon!"
>LP "oh, wow you're really yorkian!"
>she cocks her head.
>"am I in the middle of a magic thing?"
>you think of a way to explain to this anon how he got here.
"so- you play the first half life game?"
>"yeah, obviously."
"that- but- instead of trying to analyze something…. Derpy… made breakfast."
>LP "that's got to be some kind of record."
>you sit and wait for the plot to forward for a moment.
>you get an idea, and break the silence with a response.
"yeah, probably- here. I'm Tsar Anon the Inventive; let me show you around Cykablyatovia. The princesses best and foremost technologically advanced colony."
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>>27437667
>LP "you mean; wait- where is this place? Is this the valley of abundance?"
"no, this is Cykablyatovia- in the undiscovered west."
>LP "must be time travel then. I'm from the past probably- I was a human that was placed here~ and when I told twilight that we had sky scrapers, she wasn't having it.
>twilight
"no- this has to be a dimensional thing- because, twilight sparkle and her assistant are on her way here now."
>LP "Woah, strange."
>as your walking out the door. Another man walks through the portal- this anon seems to be a little more silvery than the two present.

>CA "DISCORD! CAN YOU PLEASE STOP SQREWING WITH-"
>he pauses, and looks at us- he eye's the Mosin over the other anon's shoulder, and two plasma blades manifests from his arms.
>you pull your 9mm and point it.
>"you notice what you're doing, realize that this is pointless, and put down your weapons."
"oh, hey pinkie." you say, turing to pinkie pie
>you and the other anon put away their weapons almost instantly.
>"Im pinkie pie! Im sure you're from a strange alternate universe! And I'm glad that you could make it to our little hobble of a universe!"
"how flattering. Let's show you guy's the city.
>the other anon hasn't even said a word, and you guys walk out the door and start a tour around Cykablyatovia
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These links are down, any idea what happened?

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>>27435654
From my thinking, all of it is fake; the sky, the stars, etc. It is either made that way either from magic itself, or by some being.
All of the aspects of our solar system and astrology or whatever is hidden by magical barrier.
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>>27437922
I dunno, but Droid's still works, haven't tried Idea yet
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>>27437770
>That second half

I don't really get what happened here, could you explain?
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>>27438008
Cyberpunk anon comes through portal
he calls out for discord, because he believe's the portal is a portal to discord's domain.
he see's LP anon with a rifle, and he see's a threat
by instinct, anon pulls his 9mm
then pinkie pipes in and basically jedi-mind tricks people to stop the standoff
then he egoes to show anon around the city

i dont know- but it's fucking great.
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>>27438120
I see, makes sense. Now get writing! I need more of this.
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Bump for glorious conquest of Cykablyatovia
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>>27437770
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>you point to your left
"that's the /mu/ district, that's where we get our albums, most of them from earth, my favorite is that shop there."
>you do a half step pointing to the shop that sells all the classic rock albums from the 60s
>the anon with the rifle winces at the suggestion of earth.
>probably from earth.
>he's going to shit himself when you tell him that there's a portal to earth here.

>you continue your tour.
"club penguin is in the /b/ district, over there."
>LP "this is a pretty big city."
"for you."
>you instantly snap back.
>LP "so you're an ebin shitposter, eh?"
"yeah, what about it?"
>he just smiles.
"I wanna go see the new model of Kalashnikov, so I'm going to the /k/ district."
>you take a button off of your cardigan, its quite hot outside.
>or is that the /k/ district working full speed ahead?
>you heard that some ponies shave their fur because of how hot it is in the factories here.
>gotta get some regulations on that ASAP.
"so, we manufacture our weapon's of war enhouse, from our 20mm shells to our 500 kiloton nukes."
>LP "FUCKING WHAT!"
"yeah, magically synthesized matter, took a solid 3000 uni's to get a kilo of that- thank god I got the support of the princesses."
>LP "what the- jesus christ man. I hope you don't have full power over where those bombs drop."
"they're not bombs, anon- they're missiles"
>CA "missles!"
"He speaks! Im tsar anon the inventor, nice to meet you!"
>you check your watch
"we must cut this short. We can listen to abbey road and my nuclear program later. We must meet twilight and her assistant at the train station!"

actual spoiler Two of these anon's are going to shit themselves when they see their universe's version of their waifus.
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>>27439288
interest intensifying
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>>27439383
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>>27439383
>>27439408
gonna pick up writing a bit more when it becomes night. right now i'm enjoying the sunset with a side of intoxication up in my shitposting tree.
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>>27439540
Damn, it's like midnight for me. Gonna pick this up in the morning I guess.
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>>27440297
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>>27434779
Are some of the inactive stories finished?
I really would like to read some finished stuff.
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>>27436138
>You really needed that computer to go offline.

Why just not disable "0_CPU" ?
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What would you all like to see next from me? An update to my primary story or something like what My Idea is doing?
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>>27443569
tell us why people should not trust the smile of a Jedi,
guy named Anakin trusted that smile and his life turned out not so great.
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>>27443569
The latter please
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From the last thread with love
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>>27443752
This
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>>27443910
From the last bread, with memes >>27422941
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>>27443910
>>27444282
Fug, didnt notice the added dialogue in time
Next time anon...next time....

Now check my numbers
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>>27444369

>69
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>>27443363
He has limited access. Anon prime has the admin privileges.
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>>27444411
Cannot put my shame into words famalam
C-checked
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>>27435654

Yes. We have been shown on a few occasions representations of their system, some of them contradictory. Tapestries and stained glass windows in the palace, the banners in ponyville town hall, and the globes in the school house all present their world as a planet. We have also seen numerous depictions of there being other planets in their system.
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>>27443932
>>27443752
>>27443569
Hurry up and get writing!
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>>27444530
It's just not your day
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>>27444444
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gotta get done fapping and then i'll get on writing.
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>>27439288
>through the gate, you take a electronically powered cart to the train station.
>twilight is sitting outside and next to her is her assistant Moondancer.
>LP "I- holy shit; this /is/ definitely a parallel universe, that's my wife from the other universe."
>he points at moon dancer
"that's gotta be trippy as hell to see."
>LP "you're telling me."

"Twilight! Welcome back! We, erm- have a problem!"
>TS "yeah, I know- its pretty obvious that Cyka is under attack."
"wait, what"
>you turn around.
>there's smoke and gunfire, and dark green lasers coming from the city square.

>you and the other two anons and twilight say nearly at the same time.
"Changelings."
>you run towards the gate to the country.
>you push in the override, and you're let back into cykablyatovia.
>but your visit is short lived- as you see a group of battle droids from those god awful star-wars prequels back in the early two thousands.
>you turn to the other anons to try to explain the situation.

"uhh. Hey, you ever seen star wars, by chance?"
>LP "only the prequels"
>you almost slap him.
"that's oddly helpful. There's battledroids attacking the city."
>LP "wait, what?"
"yeah~ we're getting closer and closer to half life by the moment!"
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>>27446667
>Godawful

Yeah, the movies might have been bad, but TCW and ROTS were pretty good.
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>>27446667
>you turn and look at twilight and moondancer.
>you throw your hands out to the side

"welp… To the stock-house!"
>you guys get on the train and head towards the south cykan military base.
>on the train- you get a good look at the silent anon.
>he looks like he's wearing colored contacts, and he has a satchel of black matter.

>you just had an epiphany.
"are you a cyborg?"
>he looks at you, his eyes visibly focusing.
>CA "a bit."
>you think about the situation at hand. And you look back at him.
"that's really helpful, actually, what can you do?"
>CA "muscles, eyes, and communication with computer based technology, and some programmable matter."
"sweet."
>you pick up your cell phone.
>LP "how do you have cell phones?"
"magically synthesized silicon processors based off of human text books."
>LP "sellout."
"your loss."
>you turn to speed dial, you sent Derpy off to the south compound shortly after you guys left to go see Cykablyatovia.

>DP "yeah, tsar!"
"we need video feed on head entity of the invading force. Move all troops out of city- give it to them. Switch to explosives rounds; oh, and try an EMP- see what that does… can I get some chai tea on arrival by the way?"
>DP "yeah, no problem, video feed will be provided on arrival!"
"thanks Derpy."
>LP "you're really efficient… what were you back on earth?"
"starving grad student."
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>>27446765
I haven't read your main story so I wouldn't know, but your Anon seems a bit like a Mary Sue. How did he get all of these WMDS? He just casually had nukes and emps lying around?
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>>27446943
they're magically synthesized based off of human textbooks and pony alchemy so he didn't have to look for actual uranium, they just magicked it together. also, he was an engineer grad student back on earth- if that helps.
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>>27446943
From Iraq.
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>>27446943
in addition, the normal story is mosltly SoL and this takes place quite a time after he gets a colony running.
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>>27446765
is this the pseudo /war/ thread? this is pretty great if it is.
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>>27446765
>you get to the station, and you're provided with some chai, some ice cream- chilled the old fashioned way.
>you're led to a room full of screens. And you all sit down to watch footage, football team style.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DjoRavgGqAI

>LP "wow, he's like if a ruskie became a sith."
"yeah, and he's using a blaster."
>CA "maybe he was a captain or something- that would explain the regalia."
"probably."
>you watch the destruction of the green square to the sound of Abbey Road.
"wait, wait wait right there for a second."
>DP "yeah?"
"zoom in on that arm-band!"
>she complies, and zooms in.
>a pixelated Pic Related shows up.
>TS "I know what that is! That's - that's trixie's cutie mark!"
>one of the anons looks at you, and smiles slyly.
>LP "hey, maybe… we found his wife from his dimension."
"well. Where does she live?"
>TS "everywhere, mostly."
"hey, derpy, what do you know abo-"
>DP "Shes got a show in ponyville tonight! Can I go?!"
"uh, yeah- yeah we can go."
"hope the pony likes to play hostage."
>LP "that's really stalin of you, I hope you at least ask…"
"y-yeah, of course- let's go."
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>>27447026
>Your plan

You wouldn't dare, you sick bastard
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>>27447050
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>>27447087
this might help you.
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>>27447026
>Noticing he's being watched, Droid flips off the camera, and moments later the anons hear something
>There's a loud boom, and the roof to the building is all but destroyed
>What they see shocks them
>Riding high in the sky is what one could only describe as a giant metal peanut
>They all sit there for a moment, observing the behemoth
>The screams of the ponies outside fills their ears as explosions flood the city
>Suddenly, the ship bursts into a ball of flame, before beginning it's descent to the ground
>In its place arrive three more ships at least four times the size of that one
>The bombardment stops, but not before picking back up
>The group runs outside to combat the threat, weapons drawn
>What they see is not what they imagined
>Large, red pods of some sort litter the city streets
>One lands right in front of them
>In less than a second it pops open, and three ginormous men in power armor scurry out
>They look around for a moment, but when they see the protagonists they react
>"By the Emperor, heretics! Purge them and the xenon scum they ally themselves with!"
>Not even Cyberpunk Anon can react before they raise they are blown to pieces by their enemies' bolter rifles
>Once the smoke settles, the space marines speak
>"Gah, I can't believe they would ally themselves with such a pitiful race. Continue on with the exterminatus, find the Tau army we came here for."
>"But of course, my battle brother. Let's move! For the Emperor!"

This isn't how I intend on writing my version of this silly little prompt, but if you want me to continue I shall.
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>>27447439
>before they raise

Ignore that little bit, typo b/c typing on mobile data. Should have PC and proper Internet access set up in like a week.
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>>27447439

>Spess muhreens out of nowhere
>By the guy writing a Stat Wars crossover

Holy shit I didn't see that coming, continue
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>>27447439
Battle droids are about to get fucked hard
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>>27447439
You cheeky bastard, I giggled a bit at that.
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>>27447439
i wanna see how you'd actually write it, but i saved this because of how off guard i was to this.
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>>27447439
>Droid is now Equestria's last Stand against the oncoming exterminatus

>His army is already crippled

How will he make his last Stand? Will the princesses help him?
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>>27447921
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>>27447026
>the train to ponyville was uneventful, sans your country being overwhelmed by beige CGI looking motherfuckers.
>you recently dropped the needle on your copy of Sgt. Pepper's lonely hearts club band, and you're doing pretty groovy despite the invasion.

>TS "okay, this is the place- her caravan is right over yonder."
>you break the silence
"do we need to bag her or is bribing-"
>LP "ANON! jesus!"
"fine, fine."
>you all walk to the caravan and look around for the pony in question.
>after a bit of sitting around, she comes from town holding a basket.


>you jump up.
"Ah! Hello, trixie! I'm tsar anon-"
>TX "tsar anon the inventive, I know- I've heard much about you, are you here for my show!?"
>she starts darting her eyes around, rushing to pick up what looks like a pinecone and a couple of glass cups and some a couple of odds and ends as well, off of the floor.
>TX "I'll make dinner fit for royalty- stay right there!"
>wow, she really likes you. I hope this is as easy as you think this is going to be.
"Would you like to help us free Cykablyatovia from an invasion?"
>she pokes her head out and looks at you, her hat is off now.
>TX "say what?"
"I'll fill you in if you help me." you say, waving your hand around
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>>27447983

>No servants of the Emperor

>>>/out/

Just kidding, continue on
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Bump for unconventional exterminatus. I wonder why they aren't doing it in a regular fashion, and why they're landing troops rather than bombarding the planet...
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http://vocaroo.com/i/s1Zwm9dh9GPS
Existentialist alert bump
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>>27448849
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>>27447439
>Observing the battlefield, you're only filled with dread
>Everything was going accordingly, the city was nearly yours
>Then those damn things blew up your ship
>The Challenger!
>They tossed it aside like nothing, and began a counterattack
>"Sir, we're getting reports of incoming enemy ground forces with no signs of being slowed down by our troops."
"Ugh, send in the droideka units, I want you to stop their advance at all costs."
>"Of course sir, right away."
>The commander droid steps away to perform the task
>Explosions can be seen at the very top of that hill
>Maybe you could get a look at what you're up against?
>You pull up your electrobinoculars, and take in your surroundings.

"The path is clear brothers, let's take the fight to the enemy!"
>Your unit charges over the hill, and down into the field
>You're met with some form of laser fire from down the hill
>Wait, what are those?
>By the Emperor, these aren't Tau...
"By all that is holy, what are those!? I thought we were facing Tau!"
>"Stay vigilant, Brother! We can't lay down our arms because of a new threat! It has to be why they called the exterminatus!"
"I still don't understand why they couldn't just bombard the planet as per usual. Sending in troops doesn't make sense for an extrrminatus."
>"I wasn't fortunate enough to receive the information, so I can't say. Now, let's get in there, charge!"

Kinda rushed, at work typing this
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>>27451329
So we abandoning the cisanon for a new thing or is it still a thing?
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>>27451613
No, this is a mini project, like what idea is doing. Just for shits and giggles
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>>27447439
>>27451329
Holy fuck my sides
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>>27452237
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>>27451329
>You can't believe what you're seeing
>Peering through your binoculars, you see giant hulks of men tearing through your troops like a hot knife through butter, inching closer and closer to your position
>Your droids are no match for these things
>"Sir, our troops are failing to keep their positions. At this rate, we'll be overrun in less than five minutes."
"Are you kidding me?! What happened to the destroyers?"
>"I'm sorry General, but it appears that the destroyers became the destroyed. We're running out of options."
>You're about to have this droid scrapped with the way he's talking
"You shut your goddamned mouth before I do it for you. I have one last idea. Send in the crab droids, and back them up with HMP units. If all else fails they should prove to be a good distraction for the enemy."
>"But sir, droids don't have mo-"
"Do you WANT to be scrapped?"
>"No, sir. That would be quite unpleasant."
"Then I suggest you knock it off. I want those droids sent in."
>"Roger roger."
>The droid walks towards the command terminal once more, doing the same as before
>A few moments pass before you hear the sound of your droids advancing
"Commander, over here."
>The droid returns to your side
"Prep my ship, I want to be able to get out of here if things start going south."
>It replies in that familiar, robotic tone
>"Roger roger, sir. I calculate a five minute window for the ship's preparation."
"Yeah yeah, I hear you. Get to work."
>He drones off a third time
>After half a minute, you hear the droids you called for rush into battle
>The orange death machines charge their enemy with no fear
>The red menace see this and begin to retaliate, their explosive rounds dealing heavy damage to any and all droids caught within their blast
>It's amazing how somebody can make slugthrowers that aren't completely useless
>One of your crab droids reaches them, and overpowers one of their men, tearing him to pieces with its powerful forelegs
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>>27453782
More space marine POV later, going to try and keep from dragging this on for too much longer, and get back to the main story.
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>>27453782
>>27453786
I love the droids in your stories, even if you don't use them a whole lot. Keep writing man.
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Thred is ded today. Well, besides DroidAnon. Everyone else doesn't seem to post as much tbqhfam
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>>27454714
Calm before the storm, anon. At least that's what I want to believe.
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Fuck off with this warhammer shit, I need my CIS fix
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>>27455290
Nah, the Emprah will destroy all the sith chaos loving scum. BURN THE HERITIC!
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>>27455290
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>>27455290
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>>27434779
giant robot bump
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>>27456386
ftfy
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>>27456386
>Not posting superior Battletech Mechs

Shaking my head
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>>27457037
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We /mecha/ now?
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>>27457189
No just giving inspiration for a weebanon making magic super Gundams. Or Mechwarriors that also works.
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Dropping this off before bed. Don't worry, it will be a good amount of time before this comes into play.

http://www.strawpoll.me/10304639
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>>27457233
>Dinosaurs in Equestria

I need some hot dinosaur on pony action in my life.
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>>27457233
You should have added more options to the poll.

Nazinon brings zyklon b to Equestria

Another SW fic or something

Mad scientist Anon

Etc etc
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>>27457219
I want Battletech goddamn it!
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>>27457430
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>>27457415
Whoops, meant for >>27457233
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>>27457233
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kLp_Hh6DKWc
Mountain King Anon is awakened from cryo-stasis like a balrog when earth ponies delve too greedily and too deep.
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>>27457219
I think you mean "Battlemechs", anon...
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>>27457678
Bitch get your pleb ass out. MechWarrior for life!
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>>27457702
The Mechs in Mechwarrior are called Battlemechs you dumb cuck
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*Insert let ebin glimglam popcorn meme*
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bump from 9
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>>27447983
>Trixie looks around at the caravan of un-setup props and stages.
>TX "I have a show to run, I don't think I can help anyway."
"I can pay you enough money to retire happily at what, 25? How old to ponies get anyway?"
>TX "im 30."
"riiight, and im royalty, wait- uhh, disregard that."
>TX "I really need to get back to this, but; you're welcome for dinner if you like pine!"
"naw, I'm good. Okay get the bag."
>the all look at you.
"kidding!"
>you look back at her.
"literally hundreds of pounds of bits"
>you two go back and fourth like this for a while before she breaks down and comes on the train.
>TX "A HOSTAGE!"
"an actor!"
>TX "LITERALLY PUTTING A KNIFE TO MY THROGHT!"
"it's fake!"
>Daft Punk's Random Access Memories aren't going to make this train ride any more groovy.
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>>27458521
Guess what you fucked up... again...
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>>27458536
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>>27456434
my nigga
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>>27459144
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Why you thinken 'bout writin' a story 'bout weak lil' humies? Orks 'ave the best WAAAAGH's 'round, write a story 'bout us! Give 'em a couple shooty fings an a couple o' those choppy things an' your all set!
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>>27459890
Now I'm thinking of Orcs discovering equestria and going soft when they discover they really like cuddling ponies.
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>>27460028
Of course this exists.
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>>27457340
Agreed.

Dinonon seems like the most unique/original option. I could see you doing orks as a short story but not a full fledged greenfield.

Choose whichever you like, though. Just because one option wins, you don't have to do it. Author has final say.
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>>27460086
Greenfic, damn autocorrect.
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Didn't found an appropriate thread but this feels like semi-related.

How would ponies react to some of the human vidya?
Obviously, not just some big titles like Silent Hill and Starcraft, but some of the less known, like picrelated.
It's "Perimeter", old russian RTS with some mind-fucking plot.
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>>27460293
You should create a new thread for that, unless you are talking about the general concept of vidya.

The show doesn't depict that much form of entertainment, so that give a large margin for head-cannons.
- No much entertainment because ponies are always busy working / doing chores : they would be concerned by how much time/resource/technology humans waste on something ultimately useless.
- No much entertainment because primitive technology : video game would be a big hit as they finally have games more interesting than cards/sports.
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>>27460445
Didn't they have arcade machines?
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>>27456434

>Not posting the original and best weeaboo bricks
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Mech-sized waifus are also a bonus of Macross. I'd show a Meltlan-sized pone my culture, if you know what I mean.
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>>27460545
WHY DO JAPANESE LOVE DRAWING ELVES SO MUCH
THEY ARE ABSOLUTE FAGGOTS THAT DESERVE TOTAL EXTERMINATION
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>>27460577

Elf pones when
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>>27460585

>Unicorns
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>>27460585
Reindeers?
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>>27460455
We saw it once, for a few seconds, only played by foals, and with no view of what was actually on the "screen".

If it fit your story, you can declare that they were pachinko machine with a joystick (making them a bit closer to a flipper) and that it's not something considered appropriate for mature ponies.
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>>27460597
>magic faggots
>>27460604
>forest hippie faggots

Yep, elves alright.
So, if those are elf ponies, what would count as dorf ponies?
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>>27460639
Earth Ponies.
Or maybe Yaks.
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>>27460689
>Yaks
>bigger than ponies
>dwarves
>bigger than humans/elves
Surely you jestin'.
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>>27460697
I was more focusing on the "strong / irritable / hairy" aspect.
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Mighty Battle Dildo reporting in
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>>27461264
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SO.
We gonna continue making meta combination stories that no newfag is going to understand, or are we gonna continue writing actual content?
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i hope real or this thread have gone to shit
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Boop
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>>27457233
Holy SHIT the idea of an ODST landing in Equestria sounds really appealing to me. The dinosaur option is neat too, but damn it there aren't enough Halo crossovers out there
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>>27409088
Unless I'm the person you were referring to, although I've nerve gone by that other name, he's not around, as far as I know.
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>>27463960
You make good green
It's like fine wine
Takes a while to make but damnit its good
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>>27464538
Thank you.
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>>27458521
>a couple of hours later you are nearing the cykan border.
>its about seven o'clock right now and the dusk is beginning to take hold.
>along with that is a brisk northern wind coming from the crystal empire.
>you're cardigan wasn't doing anything for you so you put on a nice bomber jacket and walk out of the train.
"hey, derpy, drop the needle on the rolling stones' 'symphony for the devil' and turn the external speakers all the way up, when I give cue."
>LP "you have external speakers, why?"
>Derpy ends this conversation before it begins by loudly announcing-
>DP "Yes sir!"
>she scurries off to find the nearest copy of the thing.
"okay, trixie, we're going to need you now."
>trixie starts to protest, but decides that its best that she stay quiet for this.
>she must see the dollar signs in this.
>she walks over to you, finishing her complementary imported oatmeal on the way over.
>you pull out your 9mm and fire off a shot.
>the droids mumbling around the gate starts firing blasters at you, but twilight puts up a barrier around the group.
>the lasers harmlessly bounce away.
>they keep firing until they realize that their efforts are futile and put their weapons down, and instead call for their commander.
>good, all to plan so far.
>the man in the Russian trench coat with that gnarly-ass collar comes out the gate, slapping around the droids as he passes.
"hey, twilight, you feel any power coming from him?"
>TS "yeah, a bit, but I wouldn't thi-"
"son of a bitch we've got a sith."
>LP "son of a bitch indeed."
"hey, Cyborg, can you mimic things with that matter? It's programmable, right?"
>CA "yeah, it is, what do you"
"make me a lightsaber, look at that tube around his waist, and copy it."
>CA "give me a moment."
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>>27465670
>he starts fucking around with the matter, it molding into a couple of shapes.
>you look back, and he's still bitching at the droids, a couple of droidekas come out of the gate, and he points at you and the group.
>they start firing with some real crazy precision, before he actually looks over.
>you could feel his heart sink.
>you and the other anon had rifles to her head.
>instead of telling the droidekas to stop, he pushes them out of the way with the force, and uses his red lightsaber to saw them in half, with aggression you can only describe as desperate.
>booya, baby!
>LP "oh shit, he's coming right for us!"
>CA "here, this should work."
>he hands you a nondescript tube with a button on it.
>at a push, it fires open into a white beam of light ending in about 3 feet.
>it's basic, but it'll work, hopefully.
>okay, now, the sith.
>you put on your best dominating voice you can muster, and shout at intimidating as possible.
>let's pull a Tsar, shall we?
"WE HAVE YOUR SIGNIFIGANT OTHER!"
>DA "I KNOW! GIVE HER THE FUCK HERE RIGHT NOW AND I-"
"AND YOU'LL WHAT? NOT KILL US? NO NO NO, THAT'S NOT HOW NEGOTIATIONS WORK!"
>DA " I WILL FU-"
>you grab trixies hair and pull on it, pressing the handgun to her eye.
"WHAT WAS THAT? I CAN'T HEAR YOU! YOU KNOW WHAT, IM SEEING RED RIGHT NOW, I MIGHT JUST ACCADENTALLY PULL THE TRIGGER!"
>DA "YOU WOULDN'T"
"REALLY NOW, WOULD YOU HESITATE! THINK ABOUT THAT- I DON'T CARE FOR HER, WHICH MEANS ONE THING!"
>you fire off a shot in-between her hooves, and she starts screaming, tears are streaming down her face and onto the floor, the other people in the group are noticeably uncomfortable.
"WHO CARES IF SHE DIES HERE? ME, YOU'D BE A FUCKING LUNATIC TO THINK THAT."
>you fire off another shot. She announces that she wants her mommy.
"AND YOU'RE NO LUNATIC, ARE YOU?"
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>>27465679
>he looks furious, he puts up his hand to try and force choke you, but nothing happens.
>you start laughing, you put on the most crazy look you can muster and look back.
"I WANT ALL THE DROIDS TO KILL THEMSELVES."
____
>you're speechless.
>you're staring down a man in a bomber jacket holding a slugger to your love.
>you know your choices, either let this one opportunity for her to be in your life slip.
>or give up the most technologically sound, and rich city in equestria.
>you know your real choice.
>you turn towards your droids.
"self destruct. Override 7…2…6…7-a."
>"rodger rodger!"
>you hear a bunch of blasters go off at the same time, and you listen to your personal platoon commit suicide.
"LET HER GO!"
>he lets her go, and pushes her towards you, through the force-field.
>you squat down and wait for her to run towards your arms.
>you knew your mistake.
>she's not from your world.
>but there has to be a memory spell of some sort.
>you pull her over via the force and you tell her to stay.
>she's far too panicked to do anything.
>the forcefield comes down.
>good thing they said nothing about you.
>you pull on your lightsaber.
>you're leaving a corpse today.
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>>27465688
Well fuck me in the alps.
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>>27465688
>okay, now for you're LARPing skills.
>you intentionally left him out of the bargain.
>nobody takes the motherland without taking a blade to the neck.
"OKAY DERPY!"
>…
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=40JmEj0_aVM
>this isn't-
>oh whatever, this is even better.
>you draw your blade, and start walking towards him.
>he draws his blade, and starts swinging like it’s a stick.
>tsk. tsk.
>your LARP style was always reminiscent of a dance.
>plus there was that one summer you learned how to do all the moves from the original dark souls.
>nobody ever sees it coming when you start rolling.
>you roll left, and get back up, swinging at the neck.
>blocked, he goes for the legs, you dive backwards and do a trick strike.
>you swing for the head, but as he goes to block it, you switch to a chest strike
>its barely blocked, and leaves a sear on his coat.
>he tried to push you back, but he cant, because you reflexively swing for his left hand, and chop it off at the forearm.
>Then your roll in for a stab, but it doesn't connect, he dodges to the side.
>he grasps his hand where it used to be, shouting loudly.
>he swings for your chest, and you dive backward.
>you don't complete your roll.
>he gets over you, and you roll to the side, it clashes with your right arm, marking a sear on your cardigan.
>he's playing for keeps.
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>>27465893
>the track changes.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VQH8ZTgna3Q
>this has to be a mixtape, you note.
>you stand up, and start swinging quickly and inconcisley, moving his blade out of the way of blocking his chest.
>he's stepping back in order to not be hit with your blade.
>he tries swinging at your face, but a magical charge hits him in the face, searing the right side.
>his stub goes up to his face, trying to grab it.
>he swings again, only to be shot with a rifle.
>he tries blocking, but he gets shot with a weak magical charge from the back.
>he's being hit from all sides.
>you note a tear coming from his right side.
>he tries one last swing at your chest.
>reflexivley, your blade clashes with his and you kick his leg out from under him.
>he falls to the floor, and he is struggling to get back up.
>he starts scooting backward.
>he tries to block his face from another rifle round, but you bring your blade down on his other arm, cutting off at the shoulder, making him armless.
>he's covering his face with his other hand.
>you bring your blade to his face.
>you pick up his blade, and throw it at the cyborg.
>he catches it.
>he tries to kick you, but his leg instead cuts itself in half off your lightsaber.
>you then cut off the useless limb.
>you turn off the lightsaber, and it turns to its original state and flies back to its original holder.
>you silently turn away and walk back to the group.
>they're speechless. You turn towards the cyborg.
You simply state "get him a robotic leg and get him to prison."
>he runs towards the sith in an act of mercy
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>>27463960
That was a calling for you and your green, I like it a lot and was wondering about it so why not make a writefag call ritual

Kimi Raikkonen was just a reference, he s a F1 driver that has the 'ice man' nickname because he never smiles, not even when he win races
Oh well, finland loses again
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>>27465905
fuck. just fuck.
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>>27465905
Could've been better, but still mildly entertaining. Odd how easily Droid was cucked
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>>27466006
its my understanding that he's been a sith for all of 6 months, and certainly not a deulist. even is tsaranon's larp shit is unstructured its still more than what droid had, which was the force, and he kind of stopped that in its tracks.
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>>27465905
>Droids shooting themselves rather than detonating
>DA taking the obvious bait
>DA getting his ass beat by a LARP'ing russkie
>DA using the force when he has little to no knowledge of it
>Droids not taking the city by the time the cast gets all the way to Ponyville and back

Could have used some improvement tee been aich
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>>27466065
>he said 'kill themselves'.
>DA was pretty emotional at the time, realize that he believed it was this or get shot.
>when has DA ever been in a real lightsaber battle?
>even rai was capable of force pulling with literally no knowledge of the force.
>he did take the city.
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>>27439540
Come back when you learn how to talk, retard.
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>>27460639
Nobody knows, as true dorfs never leave the underground
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>>27466099
to add, it's my understanding that he just /has/ a lightsaber, at least Tsaranon has been in close quarter combat with blades, even when i wrote him, he didn't even use a blade, he just had one, and he used a blaster he grabbed from a droid. also realised it wasn't just Tsaranon in on this either, he got ganked by twilight, trixie, and LP.
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Okay, not gonna make a poll for this, just going to ask. Does anyone want me to finish this silly little w40k thing I'm writing or get back into the main CIS story?
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>>27466139
you read MIOaGT's last couple of green slides right?
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>>27465912
Oh, well, glad you liked it. Yeah, I immediately Googled that when I realized it might just be a name of a real person.
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okay, was going to take LP to earth real quick and then throw the anon's back to their universes, then get back to the main green.

also as a disclaimer; i will never write tsaranon this mary sue in the main story, i realize how unrealistically powerful TA was. for me, this side-story was remedial, help me get creative again. this is not canon, this will never be canon; cheers!
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>>27466179
I have, not gonna necessarily shit on them like some people. No opinions.

Unless you actually want them. No mercy shall be shown should this happen.
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>>27466229
You know what to do

:^)
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>>27466229
i have no emotional connection with this green. it was like comfort food, fattening- only made to feel good. so feel free to roast it!
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>>27466242
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Non-special bump
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>>27465912
>there are ppl living who does not know who is Kimi
I feel European...
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bumpnigga
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>>27466274
>>27466470

>DA taking the offer

I probably haven't expressed this well enough, but he's trying to put Trixie behind him, even if he's done a poor job at it.

>Droids giving up and calling quits

Gonna sperg a bit here, but if you've seen TCW or the movies, especially in ep 1, the droids just keep shooting the shield until they themselves march through it. Something like this would have happened here to be honest.

He also has air support if he really wanted it. TA just seemed to be in a lose-lose situation here. This makes DA seem like a mary-sue, which he might be to a degree, but I intend on fixing that in my story, given time.

>Rodger Rodger

*Roger Roger

>The main characters somehow made it past the attackers and into Equestria

This puzzles me

>DA pulling Trixie with the force and being a bit of a cunt towards her

If DA still wanted her, he wouldn't have done that to her, he probably would have waited for her to approach before trying to embrace her or something

>Droids self destruction by blaster

First of all DA doesn't really seem like the kind of person to just leave himself defenseless like that, even if he wanted Trixie. With his army, he could have easily rushed their position and took her for himself. Besides, if TA killed her, he'd probably be in some deep shit with everybody there, not just DA.

Some droids can function without their heads so self destruction in that manner really just seems inefficient. Detonation would have been better, though DA would have to get some distance from the droids.

>Accept his offer or get shot

TA's bullet wouldn't have gone through the shield. They'd have to lower it which in turn would allow DA to fucked their shit.

>DA slicing up his droids

He's a sith but he's not Kylo Ren


I could keep going on, but I feel this should be enough. Keep writing though, I'd like to see more from you, just improve your punctuation and capitalization and your story would be much better
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>>27457233
Seems like ODST and Dinosaur gene scientist Anon are tied, I'll check this before I get to bed tonight to see if anything changes
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>>27468946
What if nothing changes?
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>>27469546
I'll choose one, and write the other after that.
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>>27468946
If dubs Anon has to fuck moonhorse at some point or another in your story.
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>>27469718
seconded
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>>27469718
>>27469746
You anons and your mind-reading powers.

Er.. I mean.. nothing. Absolutely nothing.
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>>27434779
Why do you think earth physical laws aren't led by alicorns? You can't just see them.
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>>27469782
Get back to SI you fucking nigger, his circuits are jamming up. The
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>>27469956
Wow hostility
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>>27469956
FI? Don't worry, that'll be coming up. I just need to get my writing juices going.
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street bump.
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>>27396490
>They're moving
>That's good

>It's time to take this baby for a test drive

>It takes a couple minutes, but the guests finally make it into the main hangar

>From the hangar control center, you can see that most of them are staying in the center
>You turn on the intercom with the flip of a switch

"Welcome to The Challenger, everybody. I'd like for all political guests to head to the elevators on the right side of the hangar, which will take you to our main observation deck. There will be an escort of droids to show you the way momentarily."

>You flip the intercom into standby and head towards the elevator behind you

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V_-sE94bnl4

>Who the hell chose these elevator songs?
>Granted, these are usually bad, but man
>Someone's getting scrapped for this

>You make it to the observation deck as your elevator arrives at the uppermost platform

>The visitors are already there, gazing through the large glass windows

>They're talking too loudly for any of them to hear you talk
>You pull up your wrist, and turn it into mode MDS-52
>It's connected to both the main hangar and this room

"Quiet in the observation chamber, please."

>Your microphone drowns out their talking, allowing you to speak
>They settle down anyway, and look towards you
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>>27470767
"Alright then. Now, you might be wondering why I decided to let you inside my ship. Earlier, I mentioned a couple things. These included global defense, as well as space travel. Rather than spoonfeed you, I'm going to let you all figure out which one I'm showing you today."

>You send a mini-transmission to FI, and the rest of the bridge crew, signalling for them to take the ship to the stars

"Now, the ship is going to shake a bit, but stay calm. I promise you're going to enjoy what's about to happen."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3MBHUENFMtU
>The ship's engines go to work, sending the ship into the sky
>There's an initial gasp in the crowd, but they simmer down quickly, taking in the scale of what they're seeing
>Their ominous buzz most sound terrifying at a distance
>Various droid fighters circle around the ship in intricate formations

>Mere minutes into the flight, and you're already about to exit the atmosphere
>The talking in the crowd below is starting to pick up
>You'll let them have this moment to themselves

>Activating your communicator, you put FI on the line
"FI, get the crew to put more power to the engines, make this dramatic."
>"Of course, as you wish, sir."
>You turn it off, and look towards the window

>The sound of the engines only adds to the badassery of this moment
>Through your communicator, you can hear the cheering from the main hangar
>They must be enjoying the hell out of this
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>>27470809
>Oh, wait!
>You forgot something!
>You switch your multitool back to MDS-52

"One last thing to know, as we enter space and leave the planet, some of you might experience light nausea or heada-"

>Before you can finish speaking, several of them empty their stomachs on the floor
>The sight causes others to follow suite, until a good portion of your guests dirty the floor with fluids
>You can only assume this is happening in the hangar as well

>You hurriedly turn your communicator back on, alerting FI
"FI, we need medical and sanitary crews to the observation deck and the hangar, we've had an accident."
>"Ah, I'd be laughing if it weren't for the fact that I cannot feel. I assume that they have experienced atmospheric sickness?"
"What do you think? Just get me those droids!"
>"Fine, fine. They will be there momentarily."

>The communicator turns off, and you shift your attention back to the politicians
>They have moved to another part of the deck, but seem to have recovered from their 'accidents'
>All of them have their eyes glued to the windows however, with their mouths agape
>You haven't realized that you've entered space


Here you go, this has been long overdue. Going to focus on this for a while, but I might finish the 40K ministory later.
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>>27470822
fuck yeah.
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>The communicator turns off, and you shift your attention back to the politicians
>They have moved to another part of the deck, but seem to have recovered from their 'accidents'
>All of them have their eyes glued to the windows however, with their mouths agape
>You haven't realized that you've entered space

>The cleanup crews arrive, and begin to deal with the mess
>The medical staff enter shortly after, and approach the group, tending to their sickness

"So. How is it? How does it feel to be one of the first to take a step into the grand beyond? To visit that which nobody ever thought was possible to go?"

>You hardly get a response as all of their attention is still focused on the environment

"Well, we aren't just here to go stargazing close up and personal. As we pass Equestria's moon, you'll see a group of asteroids just to our right."

>They shift their gazes to the floating rocks

"I've also brought you here for a weapons test. I'm going to show you just what The Challenger is capable of."

>You signal the bridge crew once more, and the broadside cannons ready their weapons

"Watch closely as the power of The Challenger turns them into nothing but dust!"

>As if on cue, the cannons fire at the asteroids
>The noise startles some of your guests, but they adjust to it
>You can hardly tell what's happening as the asteroids are pummeled with flak and turbolaser fire
>After a good twenty seconds of bombardment, the asteroids are in a state similar to that you described beforehand

>You send a cease-fire signal to the bridge, and the volley stops, leaving you feeling a bit cocky
>Oh, if only Princess Luna were here to see this, she'd absolutely love it

A little more, figured I'd be generous.
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>>27471131
I seem to have copied a bit from the last post, my mistake.
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>>27471131
Based!
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>>27469718
If this happens, he better fuck her in the bridge, while the ship is in orbit
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>>27471247
And stare at the moon as he shoots the hell out of it.
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>>27471131
Holy shit you're writing has certainly improved since you started this.
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>>27470809
I messed up a bit, as per usual.

The part about the ominous buzz is referring to the engines. Fixed in paste.
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>>>>http://www.fimfiction.net/story/279183/twilight-explains-the-solar-system

This is my headcanon (not written by me) on hom the Equestrian Solar System works.

Basically, the planet Equus (or Equestria) functuions just as Earth does, but the Sun and Moon's light is blocked by dust. Celestia and Luna simply clear the dust each morning and evening to allow light to pass through. Any weird sights are just the result of clever reflection and refraction by manipulating the dust particles.

>inb4 Okay, but how did the dust get there and how did life evolve if the dust was there?

I don't know magic

Maybe ponies evolved and had magic, but due to some worldwide catastrophe, a dust cloud was formed and ponies were forced to use magic to "raise" the sun and moon
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>>27471131
Badass, keep going!
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>>27468642
oh, yeah, forgot about point one, but in point two i made the portal man sized so he couldn't fit anything larger than a man through.
yeah, but, don't worry; there's going to be a retribution
TA forgot about the portal, and the droidekas.
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>>27468642

the situation building up to the duel is needing of a rewrite, something with more drama, and much more conflict.

you know what, i'm gonna pull a droid, im rewriting that entire leadup. its way out of character.
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>>27465688
less controversial. more realistic version.
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>you're speechless.
>you're staring down a man in a bomber jacket holding a slugger to your love.
>you know your choices, either let this one opportunity for her to be in your life slip.
>or give up the most technologically sound, and rich city in equestria.
>you know your real choice.
>okay- lets mad lib this.
>you turn towards your droids.
"self destruct. Override 7…2…6…7-a."
>"roger roger!"
>you hear a bunch of droids hit the ground.
>you look up to the captors.
"LET HER GO!"
>he lets her go, and pushes her towards you, through the force-field.
>she just runs to the side, safe from anything beside a nuke
>she's far too panicked to do anything else.
>okay, phase two.
"UP!"
>you wave your hand in a circle
>immediately all the droids around you come out of low power mode.
>the start shooting, droidekas, super battle droids, and four royal guards, all coming out of the gate. Pouring by the hundreds.
>soon your entire 107th is in this field.
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>>27472669
___
>well, that didn't work
>should've been more specific.
>so much for diplomacy
"Okay! Plan B!"
>you go to your comms.
"pull up, try that EMP right about now. Actually, belay that for about a mome'."
>you turn to your cyborg friend.
"you shielded from EMPs"
>CA "kinda."
"good enough!"
>you go back to your comms.
"pop that EMP, tell the cykans to switch to analog."
>"yessir!"
>okay
>soon enough, four M1 Abrams tanks pull up.
>a couple of years ago, back when you still weren’t a super-power, you went to earth.
>first thing you grabbed, of course, is the leaked schematics for the M1 abrams.
>things crazy, but turning it to analog was no fun.
>literally a computer operated tank made analog.
>you see the grass turn up straight, and you get goose bumps.
>there goes the EMP.
>you turn to see if the droids have electromagnetic shielding.
>probably, worth a sho- never mind.
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>>27472722
Wait, if you threw an emp, wouldn't your tanks be affected as well?
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>>27472784
>M1 Abrams.
I don't know much about tanks, but I'm fairly sure an EMP would only affect the targeting system (if it has one), as the rest of the tank is likely mechanical.
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>>27472722
>>27472784
>first thing you grabbed, of course, is the leaked schematics for the M1 abrams.
>things crazy, but turning it to analog was no fun.
>literally a computer operated tank made analog.
line 17.

________________________-
>all the normal battle droids fall limp.
>all the droidekas shields turn off.
>all the super battle droids are unfazed.
>you're overjoyed at seeing the odds wane a bit.
"WOOH! OKAY, GUYS!"
"I hope Derpy's done her job."
>you turn on the comm, hoping not to talk to an empty line.
"lets get those shells firing! Our coords are-"
>you turn to the cyborg.
"tell them our coordinates."
>the cyborg spits off some numbers immediately.
"so, danger close on that area, otherwise shell the fuck out of them, lets get the motherland back, and in time for tea, please."
>you notice twilight's struggle keeping the shield up from all these bolts.
"lets get out of here."
>you turn and run behind the train, then over the hill.
>moment of truth.
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>>27472860
>…
>…
>LP gasps at what he sees.
>Fuck yeah! That's the entire 106th, the 767th, ooh! That's the naval devision! That's the minutemen from cyka!
>even parts of the Canterlot division was able to get here.
>they must've just ran here.
>thousands of ponies standing stout, with guns strapped to their backs, barrels jutting forward.
"the unicorns get human looking weapons, if you're wondering."
>LP "h-holy shit, anon."
"yeah, I like my protection."
>you said 'a lot of guns'
>you meant what you meant.
>they have no armour, and the vehicles are kinda slow. But hey, blasters are entirley semi-auto, at least, the droids are.
>and these klashnikovs have explosive ammo every third shot, armour piercing every other two.
>the 20mm machine artillery start firing, and the NPAD fly in.
>the NPAD stands for "Non-Pegasus Air division"
>two bombers roar over you, with quad propellers, with the wonderbolt trained PAD falling out of them instead of bombs, armed with heavy machine guns.
>little more accurate, you assume.
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>>27472873
>okay, pep talk!
"can we get a loudspeaker here, cyborg?"
>he commands some of that sweet matter over to you, and it becomes a booming amplifyer.
"OKAY! WE GOT ABOUT 800+ ROBOTS OVER YONDER FIRING PLASMA!"
>you stick your hands out.
"WITH AN ARMY OF 3000, ARE WE GOING TO LOSE?"
>the all roar 'NO!'
"HELL YEAH! THAT’S WHAT I WANT TO HEAR!"
>you wait for a moment. And you make the sign for 'go'
>Derpy approaches you, and hands you an earpiece so you can listen in on overwatch.
>"Be advised, heavy artillery in the area, do not begin until the cannons go dry, eta on that- 5 minutes."
>"PAD division go ahead and go, stay levi- 100 Mlegs. Use A-Ps, over."
> you watch ass 70 blue suited wonderbolt recriuts fall out of the overhead bomber, they fly in formation, firing their machineguns at nobody in particular.
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>>27472873
>Blasters are semi-auto
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>>27472906
my bad.
>>27472882
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Five minutes of hard shelling later, they run out of ammo.
>the tanks so far haven't been firing, instead, they've ben locked up inside their depleted uranium shells.
>the droids have just been standing around heating up the exterior, and, as it seems, they've forgotten plasma is not very armor piercing.
>they succeeded in making the tank internals hot as hell, though.
>thank god for unicorns. They're all able to shield the ponies, it seems.
>and it seems the heat shielding is pretty solid.
"okay, derpy; lets throw number 67 on the needle, track 5, please."
>she flies back to the station area, hastily throwing the vinyl down.
>you go to the comms, but Overwatch has your back.
>"be advised, shelling is over, scouts reporting nearly 100 EKIAs. Green for moving in."
>"Danger close, Popping second EMP."
>"PAD please acknowledge, you are green for low sweeps; keep eye, this is a mixed battle, Spitfire, know your enemy."
>Spitfire comes over the comms. Announcing exactly how green she is.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oH6mw2Rc3DQ
>the ponies start going full force.
>the tanks fire up, and the ponies shoot off the droids trying to destroy something that the US has yet to be able to destroy.
>its like these things are made by nokia. Like damn
>you note that the super battle droids are pretty fallible when faced with uranium bullets
>you note that these droids are really quantity over quality.
"hell yeah! A-Ps are success!"
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>>27473153
I know I keep bickering, but honestly slug throwers (ballistic weaponry) would be pretty ineffective against droids. If the droids in Republic Commando are anything to go off of, shooting a BD with a guy , supers eslecially, does jack shit. You'd need explosives or plasma weaponry to do any serious damage.
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>>27473350
Gun* autocorrect
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>>27473350
explosive rounds and AP (depleted uranium) rounds are used here.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x2GTP1pe2c4
Depleted uranium
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FbsgHbXubGU
explosives
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>>27473350
trust me, droid- AP guns are very effective compared to what star wars uses.
The plasma fired, compared to kinetics are very night and day.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7jqfRlSoK60
from /k/ with love.
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>>27473350
the kinetic cycler rifle in Star wars battlefront was pretty great as a wepon.
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>>27473153
>whatever, lets see if he's as good as someone who learned sword-play in high school
>you're team cap back during junior year.
>you were deadly.
>hopefully you're a deulist too.
>and, if you arent, he gets shot on your command.
>whatever, you've won- lets have some fun.
>you turn to derpy who's been DJ-ing for the last half hour.
"okay, lets get symphony for the devil, rolling stones! Vinyl 23-a!"
>…
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=40JmEj0_aVM
>this isn't-
>oh whatever, this works
>He tries to stab first off.
>tsk. tsk.
>you dart backwards and parry his blade, noting how light this thing actually is.
>your LARP style was always reminiscent of a dance.
>plus there was that one summer you learned how to do all the moves from the original dark souls.
>nobody ever sees it coming when you start rolling.
>he tries a downward swing.
>you roll left, and get back up, swinging at the neck.
>he blocks, he goes for the legs, you dive backwards and do a trick strike.
>you swing for the head, but as he goes to block it, you switch to a chest strike
>its barely blocked, and leaves a sear on his coat.
>he tried to push you back, but he cant, because you reflexively swing for his left hand, and chop it off at the forearm.
"OH SHIT! Sorry dude."
>Then you dive in for a stab, but it doesn't connect, he dodges to the side.
>he pauses.
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>>27473574
>he grasps his hand where it used to be, shouting loudly.
>he looks back up, and continues.
>he swings for your chest, and you dive backward.
>you don't complete your roll.
>he gets over you, and you roll to the side, it clashes with your right arm, marking a sear on your jacket.
>the track changes.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VQH8ZTgna3Q
>this has to be a mixtape, you note.
>you stand up, and start swinging quickly and inconcisley, moving his blade out of the way of blocking his chest.
>he's stepping back in order to not be hit with your blade.
>he hits the back of the crowd, and he is pushed back into the circle
>he tries swinging at your face, but it gets blocked, and his blade connects with his left eye
>his stub goes up to his face, trying to grab it.
>he swings again
>he tries blocking, but he's pushed by a pony, making him stumble.
>he's starting to get heckled from the ponies around him
>you note a tear coming from his right side as a reflex to the connection on his left.
>he tries one last swing at your chest.
>reflexively, your blade clashes with his and you kick his leg out from under him.
>he falls to the floor, and he is struggling to get back up.
>he starts scooting backward.
"this is over, stop doing this to yourself!"
>he tries another swing, but it falls short when you dig the end of the blade into his knee.
>he screams, grabbing at his knee, and dropping the sabre.
>sadly, her forgets what's dug into it, and grabs the sabre instead.
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>>27473586
>ouch
>you roughly pull your blade out of his knee
>you bring your blade to his face.
>you pick up his blade, and throw it at the cyborg, whom is easialy spotted in the sea of 3ft tall ponies.
>he catches it.
>he tries to kick you, but his leg instead cuts itself in half down the middle on the saber.
>you then cut off the useless limb.
>you turn off the lightsaber, and it turns to its programmable state and flies back to its original holder.
>you silently turn away and walk back to the group, through all the soldiers, whom clear a path, and salute you on the way over
>they're speechless. You turn towards the cyborg.
You simply state "get him a robotic leg and get him to prison."
>he runs towards the sith, making his matter manifest into the parts he needs.
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>>27473599
>a couple of days later.
>you sit in a rustic smoking room, adjourning you is the anon that came through the portal with the rifle.
>the cyborg went back to his universe shortly after your confrontation with that sith.
>he mustn't have liked you.
>you were pretty harsh, though, it surprised you- you acted more sith than the sith.
>the 'take no prisoners attitude.' the way you jostled around the "hostage"
>the way you cut the captain into pieces, instead of trying to defeat him.
>you're a cardigan wearing teacher of technology with high blood pressure.
>you've never been mad, really. But, for a moment, the saying shows up in your head.
>'absolute power corrupts absolutely'
>you need to make some checks and balances.
>you're not above the law.
>yeah, and neither is the sith. He deserves a trial.
>I think he deserves to go back. Hell, you know nothing.
>for all you know, he's the /protector/ of equestria.
>or he's the conqueror.
>but there is a death toll of ponies.
>do you blame the sith? Or the droids?
>we wasn't a sith, really, more-so just a force sensitive captain.
>probably using the droids for all his real help.
>at least that was what you assumed on the ride.
>thank god you were right.
>well, the four man ganking helped, you guess.
>you break yourself out of your thoughts and look across to the anon, rifle still slung over his shoulder.
>you get his attention
"need some more alcohol, or are you ready?"
>a strongly buzzed, wild eyed anon looks up.
>he kind of went off when you told him that through the combination of magic and technology, you were able to go home.
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>>27473599
What I don't get is why droid was so clumsy that he literally kept hitting the lightsaber which wasn't even being moved
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>>27473616
human reaction, it's not his clumsiness more so its reaction to extreme pain.
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>>27473615
>he shouted about how his universe's twilight couldn't do it. How incompetent she was.
>seems all his anger towards the incompetence of his universe Is shown when juxtaposed towards the helpful, creative and imaginative pony folk of equestria.
>he was level headed as you were able to perceive, everyone breaks
>undeniable tension, set off after you tell him that the one thing he wanted back in his universe was achieved in nearly 3 months.
>you were able to calm him down, and he forgot about what he felt at the time of the incident.
>keep him drinking, and he'll calm down.
>that's how most anons work, as you, and him did that for years.
>and, as you assumed, how most anons worked.
"ready to see earth again? Get a royale with cheese?"
>"ye- yeah, let's go."
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>>27473665
Shift to droid.
>well… that was embarrassing.
>you start to think to yourself in the bright room that was this city's prison for now.
>'that Jedi had me beat from the beginning.'
>'using my anger against me like that.'
>'we looked the same, too.'

>you conclude, that you both have to be the same people, but from alternate universes.
>'those jedi are no joke.'

>your regret fills you, you're running the situation over and over again.
>'should've called in the spiders'

>'why didn't I put EMP shielding on the battle droids! They're literally nothing without electric circuits!'
>you continue on.

>you find yourself twiddling your new thumbs, coated with rubber, but somehow capable of feel.
>you get up, and pace around for an hour or so, cursing the clones for not doing their job.
>after a while, your anger turns to Ataraxia. And, you find, you just want to go home.
>its like 2 in the morning, you need sleep.
>you lay down on the plush mattress, you note its softer than the one you normally sleep on.
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>>27473746
>you're dreaming, you know that, you don’t know why, but you know.
>luna is standing across from you. Probably about to interrogate you.
>"Anon, I need you to focus, this kind of magic is very hard to use, especially across universes."
>you're taken aback
"wait, luna- Holy shit! Can you get me out?"
>"I can, but I need you to listen to me."
"yeah?"
>"get attention of the guard, ask for something- make a racket, something. The palace area you're in is about 50 feet from the portal."
>"then, I'll come on through, and we can get you out."
"yeah, that’s- that's no issue."
>"okay, all you need to do now is wake up."
>she turns around and kicks you.
>you wake up, somewhat ironically, to a song about a man named Maxwell killing a woman with a silver hammer.
>fucking human music.
>okay, now what.
>'fuck it, just start screaming'
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA"
>that'll do it.
>soon enough you have 4 guards in front of the cell, slightly scared.
>now choke! >you start faking a choke, and they come in and start pushing down on your heart.
>*POOF
>then you're out infront of a stove, where you came in.
>you almost literally dive into the portal, and luna follows you shortly
Droid has left the game.
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>>27472669
little more satisfying?
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>>27470767
"For our last demonstration, we'll fly once around our moon, before heading back down to Equus."

>For the most part, the trip was just as incredible as everything before
>It takes a good ten minutes to circle around, but once you do, the ship stops

>You feel a sudden shift in movement as the ship begins to descend towards the planet
>As the ship enters the atmosphere you can only help but feel nervous
>The Challenger alone simply won't be enough to hold a blockade on its own
>You need to make orders for smaller ships, like munificent class frigates, or recusant destroyers

>Nearing the end of your journey, you bring your gauntlet up, and switch it back to MDS-52

"As we prepare to land, I'd like for everybody to meet back in the main hangar. From there I'll have you exit the ship as we finalize today's event."

>The politicians begin to move, but you swear you could see a flash of light for a second
>Discord was right
>His plan is actually going to work!

>The guests have all but left the chamber, and the ship lands with a thud
>You step into your elevator to go and meet the guests


>Peering through the hole, you see Anonymous leave the room
>Good, you're finally alone

>"He's gone now, princess, can we get out now?"

"No, my pony, we cannot. If we do, we run the risk of being seen. We need to stay put until this mechanical menace is put above the capital. I suspect it won't be long."

>"Okay then, guess I'm taking a nap!"

>The pink pony pulls a blanket and pillow from nowhere, and oddly, falls asleep immediately

>Taking a look down the weirdly large ventilation shafts, you see no signs of any activity
>You should be safe here
>Once this is positioned above Panama, you should be in range for a long-distance teleport
>The process itself would be tiring, but you could do it
>Speaking of tiring, you notice the others are starting to fall asleep as well
>You feel the need to rest lingering inside, but you just can't
>Somepony needs to keep watch
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>>27474500
A small bumpdate, couldn't find a good image, but that's basically the size of the shaft they're in. Paste won't be updated until I can because I'm typing this on mobile, and you can't edit pastes on mobile.
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>>27474510
Also, spelling errors because mobile.
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And forgot pic, damn I'm bad at this.
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>>27475266
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Where is Writefag_is_Kill?

He's the only reason to open this god forsaken thread.
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>>27476292
Fuck off, the other writefriends are good too. Droid's getting better, but MIoaGT is still pretty much the same.
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>>27476292
Hey I found a picture of you
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>>27457233
Okay, poll hasn't changed. Next story after the SW crossover will be the dinosaur gene scientist. ODST will be after that.
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>>27477243
>You fell for the bait
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>>27474500
>"Princess Celestia, do you have a moment?"

>Turning your head, you see Twilight looking up to you with a hopeful face

"But of course, Twilight. What do you need?"

>Her eyes dart around for a moment, before locking back with yours

>"I was just wondering what you thought of that. I still can't believe we actually went to space! Something like that just seems... impossible, yet it isn't!"

>Seeing all of that, you wonder how Luna could bear a thousand years of banishment
>The deep darkness of space just seems so... unsettling

"Honestly Twilight? I'm not sure what to say. I'm about as clueless as to how the confederates could do that as you are."

>You just lied to her face
>It doesn't make much of a difference, however, as you've been lying to everypony ever since this world was conceived

>You hope you never have to face the terrors of widespread galactic warfare ever again
>The sight of burning worlds and mass genocide are some of your most haunting memories from that time
>Yet none of them can compare to the events that took place on the planet of Onderon
>You should have been smarter than that, smarter than dragging your sister to that place

>"Um... princess? Anybody home?"

>Wait, what?
>Oh, you lost yourself in your mind again

"W-what? Excuse me, Twilight, I merely lost myself in deep thought. What were you saying?"

>She smiles before speaking again

>"Oh, nothing. I was just wondering, how are you going to lower the sun and raise the moon in this cramped space?"

>That's right!
>By Tartarus, how could you have forgotten?

"Right, good question Twilight! I'll need to slip out of this space and commence with the act, it shouldn't take more than a couple seconds."

>You teleport out into the room, and hurriedly cast the spell
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>>27478426
>It seemed weird when you first came here, but you got used to it
>Your ponies still believe that you and your sister move the Sun and Moon
>In reality you've just been giving Equus a bit of a push
>The artificial planet would have been impossible to control if it weren't for the spell the two of you created
>Ironically, it took so much out of you that you were both asleep for a week's worth of time

>After focusing you energy on moving the planet, you slowly drop back to the ground, and teleport back into the crevice

>"That spell amazes me every time I get to see it cast. The power to move our celestial bodies must feel great to cast!"

"Greater than one would initially think."

>Well
>That was supposed to remain a thought, rather than be spoken aloud
>Twilight opens her mouth to speak, but is interrupted as the ship begins to move
>It seems you'll be arriving at this city earlier than expected

"Why don't you get some rest, Twilight? Today's been a long day."

>She only nods as she steps back and lies down like the others


>Observing the camera footage, you see what you've expected
>The ponies are in the ventilation shafts
>You tried to talk Discord into retrieving them then, but he insists that they are allowed to fall into his trap
>You don't necessarily agree with his plans, but if you're going to keep this place safe, sacrifices will be need to be made

>The footage ends, and you shut the terminal down

That's all for now, no pictures because reasons
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>>27478426
And yes, for anybody wondering, Celly is referring to SWTOR, the war between the Republic and the Sith Empire. I'll get into it later.
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>>27479019
You will never have an Applebot
Why live?
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>>27479049
To build one of course!
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>>27479049
Your a lazy one huh? >>27479072
this guy gets it.
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>>27479072
WHY ARE WE NOT FUNDING THIS!
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>>27478434
Wait, so Celestia, Luna, and Discord were around during the Old Republic. What about sombra?
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>>27479570
>sombra
Literally who?
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>>27479570
I think Sombra is sorta like a necessary evil. Maybe he was created with the planet in order to keep balance? (Two villains, two princesses)
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>>27481006
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>>27473847
>the train ride was uneventful in your cabin.
>the other one seemed pretty lively, a couple of twilights friends were throwing a dinner party of sorts.
>you and anon, however, were smoking cigarettes and drinking malt liquor while reading some vintage literature.
>funny thing, both of you hate reading.
>after a while you both give up trying to read "A Canterlot Wedding." and turn to trying to groove to some vintage albums.
>and that one alternative album that somehow made its way into the bunch.
>you have nothing to say to each-other. Neither of you really care for conversation.
>which is weird, because you thought you'd click pretty well.
>you both sigh as if you acting from a script for a cartoon.
>the intercom comes on.
>the captain herself starts reading from
>"we're coming in on Ponyville, thank you for choosing the Canterlot express, I know you have choices when it comes to travel and we thank you for choosing us."
>it pauses for a moment, and you hear rustling, like if they were flipping a page.
>the captain continues, with a little more pep in her voice.
>"Oh! And it looks like Tsar Anon is onboard! We personally thank you for choosing our line!"
>you roll your eyes.
>the ponies in the other cabin are more famous than you, but because you made a civilization and brought the worst side of humanity to equestria, you're the one to get all the praise.
>regret, really is the feeling that comes to heart.
"so, the plan is that we get into the castle, through the portal, then back to earth for a bit."
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>>27481404
>he looks up, it seemed like he was trying to sleep.
>"then what?"
"we got enough rubies to start a proxy war with Israel, so, really- whatever you need."
>you look up.
"I mean, you're free to stay there if you want to. But I'm pretty sure your universe needs you more than earth does."
>"yeah, that’s about the feel. But it's nice to see the world again.
>he pauses, and his bottom eyelid scrunches up a bit.
>"it's really claustrophobic here, it seems- like the sky is lower."
"yeah, I can feel that."
>"hey, if you can connect to earth, what's the chance of connecting to mine?"
"I dunno, but I'm fairly certain that the portal back in blyatovia is staying indefinitely. So- there's that. >you two were about to actually get into a conversation- but the train comes to a halt, and some staff come through to grab your bags.
>sad thing you didn't bring any.
>you get up, and are back in ponyville.
>oh the nostalgia.
>you take a deep breath, and follow twilight back to her castle.
>god damn it's only Tuesday.
>what a day it is!
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>>27481404
>walking up the steps, you follow twilight down the hallway into her workshop, previously your forge, now housing the portal.
>today you're dressed in a black cardigan with grey lining, and white stitches; the sleeves are pulled up to your elbows, showing your unimpressive forearms. You're wearing a white shirt and some off-black tighter jeans, which only go up to your hips. Topping your head is a sun-bleached fedora
>I guess stylish is all Rarity can muster.
>anon is a bit more casual today, wearing a white tee with a pocket pen protector, a pair of hand sown jeans and a pair of boots.
>really grunge, you note.
>you realize that you're about a foot from earth, and you're analyzing the clothes of you and anon.
>shrugging, you step forward.
>anon follows closely behind, climbing out of the mirror behind you.
>you greet the beach bum selling boards and weed under the table, and walk to where you paid off the shop owner to hold your mustang.
"hey, keys?"
>"yeah! Here you go senpai!"
>he throws the keys, and you fumble with them before they hit the ground.
>its like he always has these on standby incase you come back.
>that’s nice at least.
"paper?"
>without speaking, he throws you a newspaper.
>you hand it to the other anon, and he starts reading the date.
>"may twenty-seventh, 2016…"
>he looks up.
>"jesus, it's been a while."
"how long have you-"
>"about 10 years."
"Jesus."
>"lets stay away from PCs for now. They're a bit more advanced since 2006."
"I'd say."
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>>27481415
>you hop into the old, red 5.0 liter mustang, you notice that the paint is peeling in some places.
>beautiful.
>you're pulling a .09 blood alcohol percentile about now, so hopefully you drive well enough
"so, to fill you in, this is San Diego, California."
>"it's beautiful here!"
>you look at him cooly, and try to say the coolest thing you can muster.
"yeah, that's about the tone."
>you drive for a while, showing him the areas to see, before stopping in the mission valley's Hazard center.
>pulling up to a stoplight, you turn left and then take another left into a parking lot.
>you pull in, park, and get out, looking at the new 'BJs' restaurant and sports bar.
"I could go for a BJ right about now."
>"yeah, me too-"
>"but not dinner."
"oh fuck you!"
>you knew your mistake, and he looks at you with a shit eating grin.
>you simply shake your head, and walk in, and order for a table.
>sitting down, you look over your menu; he's in awe at the baller plasma TVs lining the wall.
>there's a colts V chargers game going on.
>the waiter comes by, drops off some water, and walks away
>soon she's back to take our orders, and we decide that we're going to share a Philadelphia style pizza.
>what that entails you don't know.
>just, being submersed in this technology is beautiful.

Was thinking of shelfing the other story i was doing after this crossover so that i may write a much, more detailed, and quality story.
thoughts?
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>>27481443
DO IT FAGGOT
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>>27481443
in addition, i basically read "the house on mango street" and found that my main difference between green and my prose writing is my loss in detail, i find green to be much more summarizing, instead of the prose style.

the new story would be written like how i do my detail in those two sunset scenes in the body green.
shigging along here?

also rebranding myself to something else.

if this falls through, i mean.

if it does, i do need some prompts written up.
like
Genre, Topic, MC
like
Action, Spitfire leads a revolution, Spitfire.
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>>27478434
"Divert all power from the shields to the engines, get us to Panara as quickly as possible."

>If there are two things these droids are good for, they'really certainly killing shit and following orders
>The crew turn to their terminals and press numerous buttons
>Standing up from your seat, you calmly walk to the center of the bridge, admiring the view
>The sunset sure is beautiful

>Your gauntlet beeps, grabbing your attention
>-Incoming Transmission-
>You accept the call, and a hologram of Discord appears on your wrist

>"The package is secure, and you're on your way, correct?"

"Yes, that is true. I expect we'll be there in no less than an hour."

>"Good, good. That gives me plenty of time to prepare. However, there is something I must ask of you."

"Alright, what might that be?"

>The hologram is blurry, but you swear you see Discord try to hide a smirk

>"When our friends arrive, you are to let them be. I will subdue then myself, when the time is right."

>Bullshit!
>You'd be putting your technology at risk!

"That doesn't make any sense! What if they manage to get a hold of valuable equipment, or sabatoge something?"

>"Heh, don't worry about it, my apprentice. They'll be taken care of. Besides, if anything goes wrongful, you have that remote detonation, if I am correct?"

>He has a point
>As much as you hate the idea of outsiders intruding on your glorious Panara, you aren't in the position to argue

"But of course, my master. I'll remain faithful to your plan."

>"Just as I'd expect from you, Anonymous. Two hours after the ship completes it's course, meet me in the National Office. I have some things to discuss with you."

>Fair enough

"I shall see you then, Discord."

>He gives you a big, toothy grin

>"I know you will."

>The transmission abruptly ends, and you sit back in your seat
>It would be best to put your mind on other things for the moment
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>>27482096
>They'really

I'm not even sure how that happened
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>>27479049
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC8ZEbNRLka_363htPdMXaFg
Pay this guy enough and you might.
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>>27482096
>Time passes, and you've been thinking
>We're you a fool in choosing to follow Discord's teachings?
>Sure, he's been good to you, but what makes you think he isn't just going to stab you in the back?
>A droid would never do that to you
>You honestly prefer FI's presence for that alone
>Speaking of FI...
>He's been acting weird lately
>You figured it was something to do with his circuits, but after close inspection you found nothing
>You're worried about him
>The two of you have been through too much together for something to happen to him
>Even if he's only a droid

>"Sir, w-we're approaching Pa-pa-pa-nara. I expect we will arrive in f-f-five mi-nu-nu-nutes."

>The hell?
>He's acting up again

"Is something wrong, FI? You're stuttering again."

>FI looks towards you for a moment, before stating his reply

>"I'm not sure, g-g-general. I f-feel as though I'm in su-su-sufficient working condition. I believe it m-may be a problem with my audio t-transmitter."

>Now he's really acting strange
>You've had that part replaced twice already, to no avail
>You need to bring him to servicing after this trip

"I'm sure it is, FI. Return to your duties for now, we'll get it checked out later."

>You get out of your seat, and stand in front of the glass
>You're nearly directly over the city
>Panara's lights and towers easily dwarf those of Byullenstan
>It feels good to be home

>The ship creeps to a stop
>That should mean...
>Yep, there it is
>The streak of light was there and gone in an instant
>You were barely able to catch it

>Now that they've made contact, it's time to wait
>Discord said two hours, but you've scheduled to have your ship readied a little before that
>You want to catch him off guard, just to make sure that whatever he's doing is safe
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>>27482592
That's all for now, unless I feel like writing again

Shit's going to get real soon enough
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>>27482633
Just one question. How many people are still reading my story, and are genuinely interested? I'll keep writing, and posting, regardless, but I would just like to know of what I'm writing now is any good, or if I've been improving.
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>>27482680
I'm gonna read it when it's done. Make sure to tell us and make it clear when you are done.
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>>27482710
Oh, you can bet your sweet ass I will. This story's going out with a fucking bang.
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>>27482680
This whole discord subplot has lost me.
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>>27482750
I can agree to some extent, I haven't fleshed it out enough. It'll be over soon.
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>>27482750
>>27482784
Basically, one day Anon has a meeting with a griffon ambassador. He arrives late, and begins conversation with the being. He acts odd, and, as Anon expects, something is up. He reveals himself to be Discord, and brings Anon into a series of convoluted visions, each hinting towards what Discord wants. Anon doesn't seem to get it, so he has to be blunt with him. Discord tells Anon that he, Luna, and Celestia aren't just demigods. They're beings of the force, and their origin is going to be explained later. They aren't native to Equus, although they've been there for thousands of years. After a good amount of persuasion, Discord shows Anon that when he fought the changelings, it revealed something inside of him. The glowing eyes mentioned were supposed to be a reference to sith eyes, which essentially pop up on a force sensitive individual at the times they're closest to the dark side. Discord gets Anon to believe him, and Anon eventually pledges himself to Discord's teachings so that he could refine his skills, and stop the eventual Imperial invasion. Fast forward, and Discord has Anon luring Celestia and the elements into a trap. He used Luna as bait, putting her into a temporary comatose state before teleporting her to Panara. Celestia was lead to Ponyville, in search of Discord looking for help. All she found was a black door, and a ridiculous riddle mentioning something about a key and Panara. Etc etc, fast forward agaib, now she's hiding aboard Anon's ship, using it as a means to get to the city. This is where we are now.[/spoiler[ This might not be the best explnation, came up with it in five minutes after ironcally having something to drink a little eRlier
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"Hey Twilight."
>"Yes, Anon?"
"Rainbow's got a pet tortoise named Tank, right?"
>"Yes, that's right."
"So you've got tanks here in Equestria?"
>"Of course we do!"
>she enthusaistically hoofs over a schematic of an Equestrian Armored Vehicle Mk IV
>it's literally a cardboard box with pillows strapped to it
>a smaller box with a cone poking out of it sits on top of it, with a little arrow pointing towards it saying "unicorn horn"
>the horn is zapping rainbows with little "pew pew" sound effects next to it
>this is not what you expected
>"If you think -that's- impressive, you should see the King Bengal that the Royal Guard used during the Second Yak Incursion!"
>such is life in Mechanized Equestria
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>>27483141
that sounds to adorable to fix.
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>>27483141
>Mk IV
>IV
you mean to say, there are exactly 3 iterations before the one you see.
Jesus!
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>>27483209
And because each iteration implies advancement, then Mk I must have been something
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>>27483040
Fucking hell, get some sleep
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>>27483738
This, a lot of what you said sounds like gibberish, but I could make out what it generally means. Just got to bed anon
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>>27483401
I want to see the Mk I just for a laugh.
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>>27484460
I'd imagine its just a piece of cardboard.
not even a box, just a flat bit with a hole in it
like a shield, really

better yet, just a cardboard helmet for unicorns
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>>27477495
Sick meme, bro. Did you come up with that yourself? Must be nice to not have to worry about those eighth grade classes over the summer, eh?

>>27477243
Fair point. I don't have anything against Droid, as he seems to actively improve himself and takes criticism well.

I have no particular fondness for MIoaGT, though. His grammar is awful and shows no sign of improving, and his story is ridiculous.

I'm not here just to shit on the guy, but I would suggest to him that he work on the grammar. The subject matter isn't something I would like, even if it were well written, but it would be tolerable.

Note that I'm not telling anyone to leave, just that they should improve their writing. Which they should want to do anyway.
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>>27479049

You sure about that?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nc6siQbzv9o
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>>27485306
Beat you to the mark: >>27482344
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>>27483040
Damn, this is terrible. I guess that's what I get for writing after drinking. Ignore this, I'll cook up a better explanation when I can.
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>>27482592
>Wew, that was something
>It seems like an absurdly bad spy story
>Nonetheless, you're here now

>"Is everypony alright? That was quite the teleport. A spell of that magnitude could have some serious repercussions."

>Everypony present nod their heads, signalling Celestia that they're okay

>"We're fine for now, but you're sure this is safe? I don't want my Cadence getting hurt."

>"Relax, Shining Armor. We'll all be fine. I suspect we'll be in and out of here in no less than five hours' time."

>Your brother sheepishly smiles before returning to his wife's side
>What a dork
>While that would normally come across as rude, he's YOUR dork

>"Applejack, darling, do you remember what I said about that last city? You can forget all about that, this 'Panara' is a million times better! How could one achieve such scale and beauty? I MUST open a boutique here!"

>You hadn't realised it before now
>This city puts the previous to shame!
>How does Anon manage it all by himself?
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>>27486236
"I wouldn't be so sure about that, Rarity. Judging by those walls, it seems visitors aren't welcome. You'll have to enjoy it while it lasts."

>"Hmph! I'll find a way, just you watch, Twilight! Don't you know that your good friend Rarity is a master of persuasion?"

>Rarity flips her mane, and giggles
>You can't help but hide a laugh
>Your friends sure are 'unique'

>"As much as I'd like to sit here and talk, we need to get moving. We still have to recover Princess Luna."

>"Well, where do we go? It's not like we have a map or anything."

>Celestia scans the city for a moment before pointing somewhere

"There."

>She's pointing towards the largest building in the city, right in the middle
>You hope this doesn't end badly
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>>27486250
>Thirty minutes of walking later

"We're here. Everypony quiet when we head inside."

>There isn't a single response to your command
>Good, they're learning quickly

>Opening the door with your magic, the group heads inside the building
>You can't even see your hoof in here

"Twilight, prepare a lantern spell."

>She whispers her response

>"Right away, princess!"

>Twilight casts the spell, which reveals the entrance to a long hallway
>You can faintly see something glisten at the end

"Does anypony else see that? Forgot what I said earlier, we might be out of here in less than five minutes."

>You don't wait for their response before shooting a bolt of magic down that hall, for the purpose of illuminating it
>You immediately regret the decision when you see the silhouettes of many, many beings

>"Woah, what are those?!"
>"We need to get out of here!"

"Everypony, follow me!"

>You turn around, bursting open the door with your magic
>You're greeted by the weapons of Anonymous' militia

"In the name of... ANONYMOUS! REVEAL YOURSELF!"

>You begin to prepare a spell

>"I'm afraid Anonymous just can't make it, my dear..."

>Literally who?

>A familiar figure approaches from the crowd

>Is that...?
>No, it can't be!
>He was reformed!

>"I wouldn't cast that spell of I were you. You don't want to start something you can't finish."

>Discord snaps his clawed hand
>Why can't you move?
>What is he doing?

>Discord approaches you, before putting out your spell with his fingers

>"Hey, back off mister! You don't mess with the princess like that!"

>The pink one gets in his face, an absurd look on her face

>Discord does as before, freezing the rest of the group
>He sighs, and looks towards one of his robotic companions

>"Get them with the other hostage immediately, I'll meet you there."

>"Roger Roger."

>As quickly as he came, he leaves, snapping his fingers and teleporting away
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>>27486276
Forget what I said earlier*
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>>27486276
>You're as miserable as ever
>Sitting in this shield has had you.. well...
>You've tried everything, but nothing seems to work
>For the last couple hours, you've had your mind on one thing
>Discord said that a certain somepony was about to arrive somewhere
>What did he mean by this?

>A multitude of incoming hoofsteps seem to be your imminent answer
>A door opens on the other side of the room, and a number of those droids step through, followed by Discord, and...

>Your.. sister?
>And are those the element bearers?
>How?
>None of this makes any sense!

>You'll have to think of something, and fast

>Maybe you could... aha!
>That is sure to work!

>As you were thinking up your plan, you didn't notice Discord was sitting next to you

>"So, how's it been? What would you rate your stay?"

"Pft, as if I could call this comforting. Don't think you'll get far with this nefarious plot, Discord."

>"Bahahaha!"

>He wipes a tear from his eye

>"And who, pray tell, is going to stop me? You, and your soon to be cellmates, are under this shield! I think you fail to see it Luna, but really, there's no point in trying to do anything. Your attempts so far have been quite amusing."

>"Okay, talk over!"

>He steps up, and claps his hands

>"When I open it, get them inside the shield, and be quick about it."

>The droid responds as they always do
>"Roger Roger."

>With a snap of his claws, the shield dissipates

>Now is the time to act!
>You charge your horn, preparing a delivery spell
>Before Discord can respond, the spell is cast

>It was something you cooked up in your free time down here
>It acts as both a message, and a memory wipe
>You sent a message to the only one you believe can stop this, and made Discord forget what even happened
>It was a weak spell, so it lasted just enough for you to send the message without getting noticed

>You sit back down as your friends are put into the shield, feeling accomplished
>Help will be here soon enough
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>>27484883
I feel ya
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>>27486468
>Poof
>What was that?

>Looking to your feet, you see a scroll
>How did this get here
>Picking it up, you notice the seal
>It's an image of a crescent moon on a dark background

>Luna?

>Opening the scroll, you begin to read

"Dearest Anonymous, I must write this quickly as to assure that I am not seen. I am facing a terrible predicament, and am calling upon you for help. Some time ago, I woke up in a dark room under a shield, only to be greeted by Discord. The foul worm is keeping me imprisoned, and I fear he is only beginning something dastardly. However, there is another reason I'm writing to you. I know what's happened, Anonymous. Everything Discord has shown you, everything he's feeding you, are lies. All of them. He's tricking you into becoming a pawn in his little game. I would go into further detail, but my time is running out. This artificial scroll will vanish two minutes after being opened, so I must conclude this message. Please Anonymous, look past Discord's lies, and do what is right. I desperately need your help. -Princess Luna."

>You're stunned
>Even after all you've done, you can't help but feel guilty
>God damnit, what have you gotten yourself into!

"FI, ready my ship. I need to get to the city immediately."

>As you say this, the scroll disappears from your hands

>"Of course sir. You wo-wo-wouldn't mind if I accompanied you?"

"C'mon, let's go. Someone is expecting us."
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>>27482592
>This post

Fuck Luna, FI is best husbando
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Today's episode destroyed LP's canon.
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>>27487162
F
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>>27484883
you realize that my idea's present green is an entirely different green than the one he's writing, right? it not cannon. At-least read some the original before you shit on him.
yeah. the present story is ridiculous, but the prompt that started it was pretty strange as well.
here's the original story, that from what i'm gathering, is the one he's taking seriously.
http://pastebin.com/KvQKUKGi

and, also from what i see- he's not even pasting the one in the thread right now anywhere in the bin.
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>>27481819
House on Mango Street? What are you, a high schooler in California? That's pretty much the only exposure I've ever had to that book, and everybody else who read it. Unless you're totally into Latino/Latina poetry.
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>>27488884
no, i got it from a library as a recommended read from the librarian.
i know. fucking librarys.
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bump from 9
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OH MY FUCKING GOD
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>>27489566
It's definitely one of the more...interesting books I've read. I find it odd that someone actually recommended it. Were you asking the librarian for a specific type of book, or was it recommended out of the blue?
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>>27491477
dubs
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>>27491477
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>>27491563
i asked for a book that had great detail in it about really normal things.
there i was, five minutes later, reading this book at a starbucks.
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"Hey Twilight."
>"Yes, Anon?"
"So do you guys have some kind of long-distance communication?"
>"We have mail."
"No, I mean being able to talk to someone instantly."
>You pull out your cellphone and show it to her.
>Twilight pokes it with her snoot and thinks a bit
>"We do have Dragon Fire. It allows messages to be sent quickly to the source."
"I'm guessing that nobody carries Dragonfire in their pockets, huh?"
>"Dragon Fire is a very rare and valuable material, needing the utmost precision to harvest and contain.

>Meanwhile, far away, a team of ponies quietly sneak up to a sleeping dragon with tongs, a bell jar, and a pepper shaker

>"But being able to talk to someone instantly would prove a boon. Tell me, how does that work?"
"Well, every phone has a number, and to talk to someone, you call the number."
>You start tapping keys on your phone.
>on a lark, you start tapping out a number
>it does take you a while to line up all the numbers
"and once you have the number, you press "call."
>boop
"Normally now the other person's phone would ring, they pick it up, and you talk with them. But since there aren't any other phones here, it's not going to connect to anythi-"

>vvvvvrrrrrrrmmm
>...
>both you and Twilight freeze as the vibration cuts across the room.
>slowly, both sets of eyes travel to Twilight's cutie mark.
>...
>vvvvrrrrrrrrrmmm
>again, the purple star softly vibrates and glows.
>Twilight's eyes are dinner plates
>you just kind of gape at it

>suddenly the glowing and vibration stop
>a tinny voice comes on over the phone
>"You have reached Twilight Sparkle, the Princess of Friendship. I'm not available right now, but if you have a friendship problem or other Equestria-threatening calamity, please leave a message and ill get back to you as soon as I can. Thank you, and have a magical day!"
>*beeep!*

>you spent the next hour hiding in a closet to stop Twilight from dismantling your "pocket Cutie Map"
>such is life in Butt-Dialing Equestria.
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>>27491922
kek
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>>27491922
We shall call you 'Butt-Dial'
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Bumping for moar green.
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>>27491922
Does speaking directly into her vagina allow for communication with Anon's phone?
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>>27493583
Anus, not vagina. Literal butt dialing.
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>>27486796
Ay, yo, just reading your pastebin and so far your protagonist does not read like he was a part of the CIS at all. He talks, acts and thinks like a 20 something American.
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>>27486796
>>27493827
Also your characters have a horrible case of idiocy.
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>>27493827
>>27493904
I understand this. Keep in mind that this is my first green, and the first part of it is rather choppy. I intend on going back and cleaning this up later when I have more experience.
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more green

>"Anonymous, I have a question."
"Sure, Twilight, what is it?"
>"What is this?"
>She holds up your foam dart brand foam dart blaster rifle blaster.
"Hey, that thing!"
>you pluck it out of her magical grip and take a look at it
>multiple foam dart clipazine, double flywheel semi-automatic action, and the batteries are still working
>luckily that solar battery recharger doodad came with you over to magical horseland
"It's a human toy. You put these darts-"
>you eject the magaclip from the blaster and hold it out to her, showing the darts tucked inside
"-into this thing, and pull these triggers to launch darts at things."
>you slap the detachable magazine back into the blaster
>Twilight scrunches at the plastic blaster
>"Why would you do something like that?"
"It's safer to do Humans Vs. Zombies with these than with rocks, and I prefer these over chucking socks."
>Twilight becomes both visibly confused and alarmed
>"You... this is an alternative to throwing.... socks?"
"Yup."
>"And... this is a human... toy?"
"...yes?"
>"And... you.... fire those at...zombies?"
>"uh...."
>...
>Twilight is now visibly sweating.
"You okay, Twilight?"
>"Huh? No! No, I'm fine, completely fine! Yes. That's a neat toy you have, Anon. Yes. Neat."
>You've got the distinct feeling that some grave misunderstanding has occurred.
"Is... is something wrong?"
>Twilight just stares intently at the dart rifle blaster
>you swear you can hear little cogs in her head.
"H-how about I show you how it works?"
>"NO!"
>Twilight flared her wings and used some kind of small-scale Canterlot voice.
>Upon partially deafening you, she shrinks back a bit.
>"I mean, n-no, thank you. I, um, have some princess stuff I need to do. Right now. You, uh, you go play with your... not-sock throwing thing."
>...
"Ooh-kay."
>You go outside and pop some darts at a cople of empty soda cans.
>You see Twilight staring at you through a window, wide-eyed and scribbling on her notepad.
>Such is life in no-dart Equestria.
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>>27494221
Twilight makes end of the world weapons. Out of foam.
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>>27494769
You are thinking of WMD's (Weapons of Mass Destruction)
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>>27491901
Well, I hope you enjoyed it. The author does do a very good job of describing a relatively desolate street and bringing life to it. The story that I remember most vividly was the woman who only spoke Spanish, andhow she cried when she heard her child speaking English (I wanna say it was from a Coca-Cola commercial, but it's been about 10 years since I read it). Strange book, but powerful, vivid imagery and wonderful at conveying the feelings of its characters.
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>>27437120
>Press F to pay respects to ISS
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>>27497320
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>>27497320
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>>27497320
again
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I suggest we let it die.
Whoever has content ready, let him make a new thread.
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"Hey Twilight."
>"Yes, Anonymous?"
"I'm missing a couple of LEGO bricks. Have you seen them?"
>"What are those?"
>You hold out a couple of bricks for her to examine
>"Oooh, interesting! But this is the first I've seen of these."
"Well do you know where-"
>suddenly Spike walks into the room, with a clawful of little colored blocks
>he's chewing on something with extreme difficulty
>"Hey Anon, these gems are kinda stale. Where'd you get these?"
>you suppress the urge to drop-kick him through the window
>Twilight at least has the courtesy to look embarrassed
>"Spike! What have I told you about going through Anon's things?"
>"Well maybe he shouldn't leave them all over the floor. It hurts a lot if you step on them."
>Spike saw through your anti-pony caltrop plan
>he must have raided your parts bin afterwards
>curses
>At least he only tried to eat a few of them. Evidently dragons don't like eating ABS.

>On the bright side, Twilight is ace at organizing bricks by color, shape, and type
>no more digging through the bin for you

>such is life in LEGOquestria
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>>27486796
I have to say, I'm really unhappy with how I've been writing the story recently.

I'm going on a hiatus, but when I come back expect a leap in quality and a good portion of my story to be fixed up and trimmed.
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>>27501000
>>27494221
>>27491922
gold
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where is writefag is kill
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>>27501349
the writefag writefag is kill is kill
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>>27501436
>>27501242
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>>27501242
I kinda feel like an ass just leaving you all with this little cliffhanger of sorts, so if you want, I'll put a short summary of how the story will turn out.
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>>27502130
sure
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Nobody expects the Spanish Bumpuisition!
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is this the end of the thread?
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We merely wait.
If thread dies, we wait until someone brings green and makes a new thread.
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347
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Short one today. Details after green.

>You are Luna.
>You are in nearly there.

[T minus 4603 seconds.]

>Just in time too.
>You make your way towards the cooling system, only to find it guarded.
>Swarms of the flying machines surround it.
>It's almost inconceivable that you'd reach it without bumping into one.
>Thankfully you have an alternative.
>You may not have a horn, but your armor does.
>Slipping in behind some unidentifiable structure with hopes that it will shield you from the coming barrage, you tilt your head.
>The protrusion on the top of your helmet, so placed for familiarity, lines up with the spinning fans.
>You eagerly fire the particle cannon, curious to see what destruction you'll bring.
>The world turns white.
>A thunderous crash echoes throughout.
>And to your amazement, none of the cannons turn to face you.
>None of the flying machines start to hunt you.
>In fact, many of them simply disappear from your sight.
>You hear a cacophony of metal falling gracelessly to the ground.
>Your mission is complete.
>How long do you have to live?

[WARNING. CRITICAL CONDITION. SEEK MEDICAL ATTENTION.]

>That's strange.
>It sounds much less dire than imminent death.

>Of course.
>You feel silly.
>The being that made this doesn't know your tolerances, only what it could survive.
>The machine didn't realize the durability of an alicorn.
>Still, you'd best depart before whatever substance it's using to sustain you runs out.
>Unless…
>You're taking a huge risk here.
>But the machines have stopped hunting you.
>Perhaps it's time to come out of hiding.
>Tucking yourself away as far from sigh as you can, you end your cloaking.
>You find yourself hiding behind one of the oldest machines.
>The now decommissioned lighting generator, the massive coal consuming tower of soot and ash, shields you from prying eyes.
>Behind you lies an abandoned train; the amazing device ran ceaselessly for month without ever once stopping for water.
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>>27503077
>Constructs that could rival, nay, humiliate the greatest creations of pony kind.
>Abandoned.
>Unwanted.
>Obsolete.
>You peek around the corner, and take a quick glance at the destruction you wrought.
>It’s chilling.
>A wide hole, easily large enough for you to fit through, has formed in the large radiator that you destroyed.
>And in the wall behind it.
>And in the wall behind that one.
>And through the top of the dome.
>Each hole rimmed with red hot metal, tiny rivulets still trickling down the sides.
>To your amazement, you see no wreckage; no scrap metal laying about.
>The material that made the holes is simply… gone.
>Vaporised, perhaps?
>To think that this is the power of a mobile weapon.
>Something small enough for one pony to operate.
>Its version of a crossbow.
>What sort of terrible wrath might the creature be able to exact with heavy weapons?
>With tools that couldn’t be so easily deployed?

>There’s no time for that line of thought.

“Talk to me, Twilight.”



“Twilight?”



“Answer me, Sparkle!”


>You are Sanctuary.
>You are in luck.
>Black horse survived.
>Somehow.
>The logs on her status tell you she definitely should be dead.
>You'll think about that later.
>For now though…
>You've got full control of everything tied to the mental network.
>How long will that last?
>A few minutes at the most, you reckon.
>But that's plenty of time.
>First step, you swarm the drill with your nanomachines, and have them rip it apart.
>A sizeable blast rings throughout the base as the drill goes offline, the power it once drew shorting out to the ground.
>That’ll take days, perhaps even a week to fix.
>Next step. You commander a jellyfish and bring it to a terminal.
>You have it remove black horse from the list of targets.
>She should be safe now.
>Next, you-
>Wait, no.
>Inspiration strikes you.
>A quick scan of the base tells you that Anon is already rushing toward a terminal, doubtlessly intent on regaining control.
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>>27503083
>But what if he couldn’t reach it?
>In seconds, his legs are engulfed in a swarm of your locusts, and heavy shackles anchor him in place.
>The entirety of his legs are buried in a broad heap of the grey machines.
>Why didn't you think of that before?
>No matter.
>You secure his arms too, and direct them skyward.
>No point in letting him use the weapons built into his armor.
>He might try something stupid.
>He strains and struggles, throwing the entire might of his power armor against the restraints.
>As impressive as it may be, he cannot compete with the trillions of locusts that anchor him.
>You’ll have to cycle them out periodically as they’ll run out of power.
>But eventually, so too will he.
>The greatest threat to your future has been neutralised.
>You control your own facilities once more.
>There’s still some serious issues to address.
>Like how your better half is still a meat puppet.
>But at least you’re not crippled anymore.

“We've got it. Tell Luna to come home.”



>No answer.
>Purple horse is distracted.
>You have the solution to that.
>And with black horse in such serious condition, you’re not interested in waiting around.


>You are Twilight Sparkle.
>You are-

“Augh!”

>Nursing a sore rump.
>It feels like it was burnt!

>”Narrow light. Huh.”

>You're not sure what Spike’s talking about.
>Unless…

“Did the ape just zap me?”

>”It’s not an ape.”

>The smell of burnt fur confirms it for you.
>Why you aughtta…
>You return to the terminal to give it a piece of your mind.

>”Damn it, Sparkle. Talk to me!”

“Luna!”

>You rush to the terminal, hooves stamping wildly as you go.

“Oh thank Celestia you're okay!”

>”I wouldn't say okay. What's my next target? And tell me quick, I'm sure to be found out soon.”

>You don't need to ask the ape.
>It's already told you.
>The writing’s on the table.
>And for once, your goals coincide.
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>>27503088
“Return immediately. It should be safe to go uncloaked, but I wouldn't advise it.”

>”What is my next target?”

“That's what it says! Come home!”

>”Sparkle, I swear-”

>”She's telling the truth.”

>Spike’s interjection halts Luna’s threat immediately.
>Much to your surprise.

>”Very well, I'll return post haste.”

[No signal.]

>Why didn't she trust you?
>Why did she trust Spike?

>”So, that's it then? Sorta anticlimactic.”

“Dash! When did you get back?”

>”While you were crying your eyes out.”

>You can already feel the blush forming on your face.
>She's never going to let you live that down.
>You eagerly change the subject.

“No, I don't think it's over. We just bought some time.”

>Dash drops to the ground again, landing much more gracefully than last time.
>And you?
>You feel a strange force tugging at your very soul.
>An experimental light cantrip confirms your fears by failing.
>Magic has left you once more.

>”Yes, we only bought time. And not a lot of it. Step aside, I need to use that thing.”

“What-”

>”Move!”

>You haven't ever seen Spike like this.
>Aggressive, commanding, driven…
>He's a bit scary, actually.
>To your amazement, he leaps atop the glowy box in a single bound.
>Despite it being nearly twice as tall as he.

“How-”

>”My good leg is very strong. Now shush, I need to ask a HUGE favour.”

>His good leg?
>But he shouldn’t be nearly that strong.
>He’s never been able to jump like that before.
>And everything you’ve read about dragons suggests that, while immensely powerful, they shouldn’t be able to do THAT.
>At least, not before they’ve grown their wings.
>Why is it now that he only has one good leg, that the other’s been replaced with metal, should he-
>Realisation suddenly strikes.
>He’s referring to his prosthetic as the good one.
>Which means that his natural body is the bad one.
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>>27503102
>You’re not sure where this will lead, but you don’t expect you’ll like it.


That's it. Like I said, short one.

With this story nearly in the final arc, I've been spending a significant amount of time considering my next writing project. A good portion of my writing time has gone into outlining it, which cut into production a fair bit. On the bright side, the new project has me somewhat excited again. I think I've got an idea that'd be worth writing, and what's more is it would even fit in this thread. Mostly. Provided you aren't too triggered by human free green. There's a lot of stuff to be planned out yet and I'm not sure what the overall tone will be, but hopefully I'll have most of that figured out by the time this is done. Even if I do, expect me to disappear for a few weeks or maybe even a month since I intend to take a break after this. Writefagging takes a lot of time.

So, do you mind human free green? And is it okay if the story is more about magitech than a direct competition of magic and technology?
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>>27503150
its so beautiful. you could sell this stuff, its a masterpiece!

>human free green
Great! One of the reasons I love Sanctuary is the fully-developed character Anon. Most greens have self-insert anons, but I really like this fleshed out one. SO human-free would be great, devoid of any self-insert!

Magitech? Intriguing.....I would love to see your interpretation of how magic functions in a scientific sense

i love you
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What story is the best written?
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>>27503394
writefag_is_kill's

start here
http://pastebin.com/3Mt5iYBQ

then here
http://pastebin.com/430ryWVh

then here
http://pastebin.com/bnVFCnPw

then, finally, here >>27503077


It's one big story. Anon is a highly advanced visitor to Equestria, who fights the ponies and other stuff.
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>>27503394
Due to it being such a large story, requiring three pastes, you may wish to read it in a more conventional manner. I have collected the entire story so far into one file, which you can find here

https://www.dropbox.com/s/75eo9jr7d6jafbk/Writefag_Is_Kill_Steel_Sanctuary.doc?dl=0

i collected it so i could reread it in case the internet goes out
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>>27503456
Oh hello, now that does sound pretty damn neato.
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>>27503535
>i collected it so i could reread it in case the internet goes out
The world needs more people like you. There's a lot of books that could end up being burned by one terrorist or hacker getting into the wrong place at the right time.
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>>27503594
Thank you, anon. Have a cute pone scratching their head
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>>27503456
>>27503535
Well okay then.

His story quite literally went from 0 to 100 in the span of a paragraph.
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My little progress to page 9 must be stopped.
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>>27503456
I'm reading through the first one now and I have to ask; at any point in the story do any other races ever make an appearance?

Changelings perhaps? Griffons?
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>>27504959
You're looking for LP's story.
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>>27504998
Or Droid Anon, changelings make a decent appearance in his.
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>>27505040
Droid Anon's story is kinda... ehh.
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>>27504998
>listed as inactive
fug
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>>27505095
It always is. Of all the writefags here, he takes the longest to post updates by far.
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>>27505083
True, but for a first time writer I think it's decent. He just needs some work in character development. Kinda like what this guy means.
>>27493827
>>27493904

At least he says he's going to fix it anyways.
>>27494072
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>>27503387
Thank you. I've tried very hard to distance this Anon from myself, to make him his own person. It's not easy since all writing is autobiographical to some degree, so I'm glad to hear it paid off.

>>27503456
Flattery will get you everywhere.

>>27503535
Would you object if I were to link that in one of my pastes?

>>27504018
Were I to revise this story, the beginning would be quite different. That is unlikely to happen.
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Tech-wise, I kinda wish the show had more brass, Vernian mad science, and steampunk. All this stuff with Manehattan and Vinyl Scratch is starting to feel a bit too modern.
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>>27503150
>human free green
Not even going to consider reading.
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>>27505691
You are everything that is wrong with this board.
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>>27506057
You could always go to fimfic if you don't like it mate, back to ponychan is an option too.
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>>27505667
The Doc's lab is probably the closest we've gotten to what you've described, and that was more of a homage to the DW fanbase than the direction the show will follow from here on if I were to guess.
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>>27505691
Sometimes that can be the best green. Especially with changeling stories. Changeling-pony interaction can make for some of the best romances.
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>>27506141
Yeah, just posting it as an example. You're probably right, unfortunately. Even though they listed "steampunk villages" as some of the inspirations for Ponyville's aesthetic, it's not something they seem keen to follow up on.
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>>27503102
Dude, your story is fantastic. I love your human character, getting a kick out of the ponies trying to kill him and trying to study all the ways they try is hilarious.
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>>27503150
> human free green
It would be refreshing, do it.
But be warned that most Anons won't like a non self-insert story.
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>>27506538
>But be warned that most Anons won't like a non self-insert story.
>implying
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>>27505104
Which is a real shame because I really like LP's work.
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>>27503150
Human free? What do you mean by that? Other aliens? Or something already from their planet?
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>>27503535
>Spoiler
>Not saving on firefox 'read list'(or something like that), which automatically saves the paste even if the paste is modified/deleted later
Well at least the phone version does that, never used the browser one
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Pony sex-bots in Equestria when
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>>27509414
Why does it's horn looks like a blade?
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>>27503150
>With this story nearly in the final arc,
reeeeeee
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>>27510583
If I had to guess it's because Vinyl is the type that would want blade horn on a robot duplicate
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>>27507584
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>>27512176
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>>27491922
WHOPPER!
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>>27505467
sure, you can link it. it is your story

>>27508698
i'd like to be able to transfer it freely anyway
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>"Anon. Hey, Anon."
>The first thing you feel is a hoof booping your nose
>boop boop boop
>You crack an eye open and look over to the edge of the bed
>first to the pony-head shaped object staring at you, then to the illuminated alarm clock on your bedstead.
>you angrily snuggle deeper into your borrowed futon
"Dammit, Twiggles. It's 3AM. What is it?"
>"It's Twilight. And I have a question."
>You groan. Normally she waits until daylight to ask things but here she is anyway.
"Fine, what is it?"
>I've been looking over the records for the Apo-lol missions, and I noticed that all of the ass-tro-nots were all good humans."
>she hovers up a small pocket manual of the Apollo Program.
>Twiggles was looking through your books again.
>At least she stopped trying to dismantle your laptop
"You woke me up at three in the morning to say that?"
>you can see her frown in the darkness.
>"I wasn't done. They were brave and selfless, they didn't do anything wrong, so why were they banished to the moon?"
>...
"Come again?"
>"Three men, banished to the moon for several days, then they come right back. And your space agency did it seventeen times!"
>because it's 3AM and you have no coffee, you had to chew on that question for a minute before it clicks
"Twilight, they weren't banished. They were chosen in order to explore the moon."
>"As punishment?"
>what
"No, as part of a program to explore the moon and gain a better understanding of it, and to bring back samples for study."
>"...as punishment."
>evidently your brain isn't the only one not working at 3AM
"Fucking- no, Twilight. It was a science program. Deeper understanding of the universe and how the moon was made and what it was made of and that it wasn't fucking made of cheese. Can I go to sleep now?"
>...
>"Your moon was made of cheese?"
"GOODNIGHT TWILIGHT."

1/2
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>>27513699

>You woke up the next morning cranky as fuck because Twilight couldn't wait until morning.
>As you're walking by her work desk, you see her sprawled on top of it
>open books and discarded scrolls litter the workspace, and an upended ink bottle had long spread its contents over one hapless piece of parchment
>Twilight is fast asleep, a puddle of drool forming out of the corner of her mouth as she snorts in her sleep, quill stuck in her rumpled hair.
>judging by the bags under her eyes, she really needed the shuteye right now
>as you approach her, you spot a piece of parchment with smaller scribbles on it, but the main title catches your eye
>"APOLLO SPACE PROGRAM- INNOCENT SPACE PRISONERS HARVESTING MOON CHEESE?!"
>you gently and gingerly pluck the scroll from under her drooling chin. As you turn to chuck it into the wastebin, you hear her mutter
>"....zzzz*snrk*-mmm.... farting during day court, two days mo-moon...zzzzzzz"
>you drape a nearby blanket over her shoulders and leave her to dream.
>such is life in no-space-program Equestria.

2/2 because i don't know.
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>>27503150

it was good, take your time man.

thanks
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>>27505691
Suit yourself.

>>27506479
Thank you kindly.

>>27506538
That's fine. If you've been around long enough you'll know that I have no problem alienating readers in order to write what I want.

>>27508530
No Ayys. Minor spoilers, but this will all likely be established in the first batch of green. It'd be about Equestria entering a technological golden age with new inventions every couple months, but some ponies think something doesn't quite add up.

>>27513453
Thanks. I was considering setting something like that up after I finished, so this is convenient.

>>27513789
Ponk a cute.
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>>27514522
I've never really cared for stories about the ponies getting all advanced and high tech.

It just feels incredibly HERETICAL.
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>>27513708
>>27513699
fucking yes

best writefag in thread excluding is_killim only here for his story, are the others good?
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>>27513708
You're a genius.
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goodnight bump
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>>27513708
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>tfw can't find My Little Progress : Technology Isn't Magic #1
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>>27515376
Look hard. It was a good time. It was also like half a year ago and we didn't have that name, just the prompt. Happy hunting. Post a link if you do find it.
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>>27515386
>>27515376
Was this not the first thread?

http://desustorage.org/mlp/thread/24647656
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>>27514578
Eh, the others aren't THAT painful to read but I can't suggest them. The best ones started and finished (or were abandoned) when these threads first started.

>>27515376
Because it wasn't fucking called that, it was just a prompt.
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>>27515388
Yep, that's the one.
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>>27515388
Ah that's right, it started on good ol' freedom day.
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>>27515388
Going back over these stories, I realise how many great writers we've lost. Please come back AP_Epikyur
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>>27515699
Looking over the inactive list always makes sad
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>>27517192
Mediaeval alchemy was never able to create a true aphrodisiac... Modern science tried, but hasn't really gotten anywhere. (otherwise the stuff would have replaced roofies right now)

Medieval witchcraft was never able to create a true love potion. Neither has modern thaumatergy. (Otherwise they'd have replaced hoofies right now)

When chemist Anon gathers Princess Cadence's attention, they some up with a formula for the most coveted substance in Equestria under the fountain of youth: a non-toxic love-potion.

Their test subject: Twiggles, of course!
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>>27517286
the d is ready.
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>>27517286
A desperately horny Twilight makes my dick rock hard.
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>>27517286
Yes
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>>27517286
> Modern science tried, but hasn't really gotten anywhere. (otherwise the stuff would have replaced roofies right now)
Roofies ARE the science version of a love-potion. Science can always solve your problems and make your dream come true, just it's rarely exactly what you hoped for.
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>>27518257
Sedative hypnotic muscle relaxants that cause amnesia are not love potions. They do not boost the user's desire.
You're just a rapist.
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>>27518359
It's all a matter of perspective really.
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>>27518257
>Science can always solve your problems and make your dream come true, just it's rarely exactly what you hoped for.

Ahh, so science is like a cruel genie.
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>>27519470
More like a clutsy genie.
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>>27519470
>Anon and Twiggles somehow create an AI, spread over a cloud of nanomachines
>it proceeds to execute given commands
>or "granting wishes", for the technically-challenged equines

>being a young AI, it doesn't understand half of them
>but complies anyway, doing it's best

>chaos ensues as the ultimate party is being trashed by punch slimes, cake monsters, living balls of confetti and excited Discord jumping around, crying tears of pure joy
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>>27520109
Discord would be laying on the ground in a literal puddle of afterglow.
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>>27520125
Would it be from him, or the nanomachines? Or do we even want to know?
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>>27520141
I meant it to be him, but now I'm not sure myself.
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>>27520205
Would it really matter for him?
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>>27520225
I suppose not really. I'm just saying, the ensuing chaos would get him off. Repeatedly.
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>>27520361
it would be sexier if it was Eris.
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mercy bump
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>>27521992
pity bump in the night
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>>27523290
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>>27523768
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Here's a clip for both Droid Anon and writefag is kill that I think fits their stories.
http://www.starwars.com/video/activate-the-droids
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>>27524219
I think that's that cheating a bit for droid since his is a star wars crossover
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>>27525487
Dash would love humanity's obsession with going fast and flying
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>>27524219
>>27524952
dat fuggin music tho

rivals the imperial march in my opnion
droid march is awesome
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>>27526298
I'm not sure I would go that far but it's definitely a really solid piece
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>>27526298
>>27524219
Based.

I've been playing a shit ton of the older Halo games lately. When I start writing again, I'll probably do the Halo story first, still undecided.
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>>27527013
Combat Evolved was my childhood. I sunk so many hours into that game, beat the campaign on every difficulty multiple times and modded the shit out of it.
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Twilight: I can't really believe your story Anon.Toys and machines that can replace stallions?Shiny clothes that can make you lewd,but are completely waterproof? And yet there's no magic in your world? Please.
>Growing tired of Twilight's berating, you go out into the world to prove her wrong.
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>>27527227
>Anon arrives later in a latex suit with spinning dildos taped onto it.
>Twilight is blown away, such marvel of technical ingenuity was never seen before, much less from a stallion.
>Sex happens
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>>27527227
>Toys and machines that can replace stallions?
you what

neither can replace a living breathing mate you fool
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>>27527376

Excuse you?
>https://youtu.be/uzO2mi4uHAs
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>>27527376
You say a machine cannot replace a stallion, but what is a stallion if not a machine made of meat?
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>>27528540
What is a mare if not a warm hole?
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>>27528554
A warm hole attached to a machine made of meat.
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>>27528869
U-unf...
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It'd been a while since I read any AiE and since AiE is dead I thought I would give this thread a go.
Only started this morning, however;

>Scotty's story
it interesting and felt more like a slice of life than the rest, I would enjoy seeing where it goes. I enjoy the lack of violent conflict.

>My Idea of a Good Time
It was a bit dopey at first but I liked the student teacher relationship going on between twilight and Anon. Then Anon was mad a Prince/Tsar which I felt was forced and kinda out of place for the type of story thus far. I then entirely stopped reading when Anon went full retard and used his pistol on the watermelon, asking twilight to send out a message with something like "Don't fuck with the Tsar" to the other nations. Full Retard/10.

>Droid Anon
I'm gunna be honest, I stopped reading as soon as I realized it was a star wars crossover. Dunno why something about star wars cross overs really put me off.

1/2
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>>27529082

>Writeface_Is_Kill
This one took the most amount of time to get up to date with. To begin with I was interested in the "Factorio" side of things (Which I assume a lot of the beginning inspiration was taken from.) The technical talk was/is quite nice. As the story progressed I felt some minor fear for Anon as he had to fight with such limited resources, however nearing the middle/end of the story as it stands all amount of tension was lost as it became clear that Anon's only REAL threat was Discord. However, Towards the end of the story I began to feel as though the story was getting progressively more "Ramped". One simple bad guy was no longer enough. Making Celestia the bad guy, then Luna, Then Celestia again, then Discord and before we could even move on from discord the "Titans". It feels a little bit like the writer is so used to needing a conflict in the form of "A bad guy" for the story to progress that its almost losing track of what it is and where it wants to go. Feeling that EVERY arc needs to be MORE epic than the last. Only word of wisdom there would be to make sure to plan where you want it to go before writing the full story. Otherwise you'll wind up with more loose ends or sloppy finishes than you want.

If anyone would want me to read their story or give a slightly more detailed opinion on theirs let me know and I'll attempt to do my best.

2/2
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>>27529091
writefag_is_kill'
>writeface_is_kill
This is why I don't bother writing myself, who the fuck has time to proof read.
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>>27503150
So wait, if it's human free, who's bringing the tech?
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>>27529091
>needing a conflict in the form of "A bad guy" for the story to progress
>EVERY arc needs to be MORE epic than the last

You took the words right out of my mouth. I knew I wasn't the only one who thought the Titans thing was out of hand.
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>>27529608
im loving it

>>27529511
zebras are secretly technological masters of Equestria
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>>27529608
Don't feel too bad about it, though.

There are stories by professionals that make this mistake. The Slice of Life is ruined by it.

One part of my early teens in particular ruined by such was pic related.
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>>27528869
>It's been a long day, and you're sitting here on your bed.
>Your honey has been in the bathroom forever, but you could care less.
>A military job is quite tiring, you'd assume, and it brings in a good load of income.
>Especially where you live.
>The faucet stops, and the house is quiet.
>You'd expect your sugar to have come out, but the door is still shut with no sings of activity.
"You almost done in there hun? I'm getting oh so lonely... mhmhmm..."
>The door bursts open, and in its place stands your husband.
>He wastes no time in joining you on the bed.
>You can only giggle as he holds you in his embrace.
"I'm excited for tonight, dear..."
>You trace a hoof around his midsection.
"Mmhmhm... you ready?"
>Your husband pulls you close.
>"Roger Roger." he says.
>He grabs you with his powerful metal hands, and sprawls you onto the bed.

>Hot sexy times ensue, but because I can't write smut for shit, you're left with this.

God DroidAnon, you have no idea what you've started.
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>>27529966
Oh my fucking god, if you would have just finished it off with some smut, we could have had another Shrek-esque meme pop up.


Roger Roger
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>>27529966
Beautiful. Keep going
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>>27529091
A fair criticism. I sometimes regret not moving straight into the wrapup after Spike got smashed. Oh well, it's too late for that now.
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I don't know.

"Oh for fuck's sake, Twilight, leave my computer alone!"
>"NO! This time you've gone too far, Anonymous! That.... that THING must be confiscated!"
>The only reason Twilight hasn't tried to teleport through the door is because the closet is too small for the both of you
>but she's pretty content with standing outside the door and yelling through it
"It's not my fault that happened, Twilight! I didn't even say anything to her about it!"
>"Rainbow Dash strapped a BOMB to her flank, Anonymous! A BOMB!"
>it was really more of a giant, repurposed rocket firework
>see, sometimes Rainbow comes over to shoot the shit
>and this time she may have caught you watching Apollo 13
>and you maaaaaay have let her watch the rocket launch sequence
>you swear you had to pry her face off of the screen after that part ended
>afterwards she was in your face, asking questions about what happened and how fast they were going and whatnot
>you told her about basic rocketry and stuff, and how people strapped themselves into giant boxes made of explosions and told gravity to piss off
>in hindsight, you should have caught that glimmer in her eye to be a bad sign
>so of course Rainbow had to prove herself as awesome as the humans and try to into space
>but Equestria had no formal space program
>they did have ginormous fireworks though
>you didn't think anyone would be crazy enough to strap themselves to one
>nor did you think anyone would forget that most fireworks explode
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>>27531011

>you didn't see what happened, but you saw an exhaust plume in the distance, Twilight freaking out and teleporting, and a couple of hours later, Twilight bursts into your room with her mane singed and cotton candy stuck to her fur
>you barely got a word out before she started reading you the riot act and demanding you hand over your computer
>and here you are, holed up in your closet, cradling your laptop
>"That information is too dangerous to be left unchecked, Anonymous! It must be secured and supervised by the proper authorities!

I demand you hoof it over right now!"
"Take a hike, Twiggles!"
>"Anonymous, I'm going to count to three, and you best be out here before I reach three! One-!"
"No!"
>"Two!"
"Leave me alone, Twilight!"
>"Thre-"
>"aaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAANOOOOOOONNNN!"
>you hear something smash through your window and tumble to the floor
>"Rainbow?! You're supposed to be in the hospital-!"
>"Doc checked me out early, Twilight. Anon, you in here?"
>"He's in that closet. He won't surrender his computer!"
>"Oh, good, he still has it!" You hear Rainbow approach the door.
>"Anon, you gotta show me that pic-er again!"
>"Rainbow! You almost blew yourself to Tartarus with that stunt!"
>"I know, so I need to look at Anon's magic box again! Maybe they did something I didn't do!"
>like establish a proper space program
>although, being the resident ape analogue, you might not like that idea too much
>"No, Rainbow, that's too dangerous! I need to confiscate that thing for safekeeping!"
>"Come on Twilight! I just need another look, and then I'll get it down pat!"
>you heave a sigh and slump lower into the closet while the ponies outside continue arguing
>such is life in pre-rocket Equestria.
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>>27529655
WE
WUZ
KANGZ
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>>27530874
It doesn't need to just end. It is possible to have an entire arc with plenty of conflict without a big bad at all. Ex of conflict

1. Anon doesn't want to give any real tech understanding to the ponies because he plans to get home and knows he would have trouble with the government if he was arming the local populace. He also has begun to view the ponies as people with moral weight. He also is from an advanced civilization, such that I am not sure he comprehends how comparatively shit life is for the average pony (Working 20h a week is awful, disease and poverty are things). If someone (probably Pinkie or Luna) were to beg him for the cure to some terminal illness which afflicts a substantial portion of the populace, he would be torn between his desire to prevent unnecessary suffering and his desire to be able to return home with no trouble.

2. Spikes transdragonism. Twilight is against, Spike and Luna are for. Arguments about what makes spike spike instead of not spike ensue. Perhaps pinkie tries to reverse engineer. (if she manages this would Anon try to prevent or undo to minimise impact?)

3. Twilight's issues. She still dislikes Anon quite a bit, yet is princess of friendship. Spike/Shining armor try to show her error of ways?

4. Celestia/Luna dark magic addiction. Is it public knowledge now? How does Twilight react after Titan thing settles down. Twilight hates Apes because Celly says they suck. Would this alter her perceptions?

5. Discord/Fluttershy. Does Fluttershy know what he has been doing? If anon discovers relationship, can he convince Fluttershy to talk to discord? Does Fluttershy apologize for attacking on sight?

6. Effects on international relations once others learn about anon.

7. Effects of reverse engineered tech on Pone society.

8. If anon finishes the gate, what will be on the other side? It's been a while.

See. Plenty to write about without a big bad.
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>no finished stories
wtf is wrong with this thread?
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>>27531028
> Not helping Rainbow blow up herself, Kerbal style.
Why do you hate fun so much ?
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>>27533098
The stories here get REALLY long, however I personally count LP's story as "finished, but now doing a sequel"
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>>27533079
>If anon finishes the gate, what will be on the other side? It's been a while.

Technological singularity, planet is black smooth sphere - some kind of gigantic computer.

When an civilization has gotten extremely advanced it transforms into one of these dark matter spheres.
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>>27534474
>Jupiter brain
Doubt it. After all, Anon's a meatbag. Meatbag with extensive augmentations, but meatbag still.
To utilize the supercomputer of such scale you should have already transcended your organic body.
Kill's humanity seem to not have yet made that important step.
Which means: they are /close/ to singularity but not quite there yet.
And we didn't see any AIs yet. Anon's co-brain doesn't really count.

Related thought: how would ponies react to the concept of non-magical artificial intelligence? Something fundamentally different, a completely artificial form of life, thinking machine, self-aware program.
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>>27531011
>>27531028
>"That information is too dangerous to be left unchecked, Anonymous! It must be secured and supervised by the proper authorities!"
And that is how SCP in Equestria was born...
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>>27534587
>And that is how SCP in Equestria was born...
>implying it hasn't secretly existed since the founding of Equestria.
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>>27534594
Usually such things are to be handled by Twilight or some other errand colt.
But this time Twilight just wouldn't shut up until Celestia finally caved, signing necessary papers just to get rid of the purple headache.
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>>27531028
keep it up

>>27530874
NEVER EVER STOP ok, you can stop at the last arc
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>>27531028
I would love to read more greentext where ponies learn tidbits of humanity's achievements and try to replicate them without proper understanding of how they were achieved.
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>>27535873
>without proper understanding of how they were achieved.
I mean, isn't that how we discovered most of everything we did?
There are relatively few things that we have done in history that we planned thouroughly and perfectly with math before trying in practice, and even then, we still didn't know what wee were doing.
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>>27536673
True but we at least understood the basic idea of "how" we were planing to achieve what we have in mind. The point being these ponies are doing the whole "monkey see, monkey do" thing. They lack the knowledge we had before we started the projects that we needed for them to be successful.
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>>27536690
Oh, you mean they don't have a problem for the invention to solve- they're just doing it willy-nilly.
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>>27536859
Rather they see us building a solid rocket booster which can be detached from the main craft when empty after performing it's purpose and think "that is just a firework" and attach one with some rope.

That sort of "idea is there, method is not" sort of logic that saw the south Americans amazed by the Spanish wands that spat fire. That made them believe them gods.
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>>27536967
>Equestria space program is literally Kerbal Space Program with ponies
There is no way that could end badly...
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>>27530874
That's my only criticism.
I've seen it destroy entire stories in AiE and I've been really REALLY enjoying this one.
Keep writing the good stuff.
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>>27537112
It'll be fine. Look we even have three volunteers.
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>>27537712
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS SPACE INVADERS! YAY!
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>>27537112
>>27537712
>>27538001
I so badly want this
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>>27539019
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bump 10
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>>27434779
bump
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>>27535873
I kind of want to want to write something along those lines... maybe next thread
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>>27543329
Please do. I will be expecting you next thread now. Don't disappoint.
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>>27543514
I'll try not to disappoint.
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>>27543909
Honestly, as long as you deliver, you won't disappoint.
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soon to be dead thread bump
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bump from 9
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>>27544348
>>27545091
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>>27545628
one more time now
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We'll need a new thread soon... any volunteers?
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As long as someone does it quick I don't care.
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No more bumps 4 U
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>>27546463
>>27546463
>>27546463
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