/efg/ - Erotic Fiction General

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>>7011835
Reposting my stuff:

Snek
http://pastebin.com/DVTusz4B
>XCOM Viper, lamia, monstergirl, femdom, size difference, large breasts, light bondage, oral, vaginal, language barrier, bathing, teasing, kissing

Crashland:
http://pastebin.com/E6WVfvK1
>monstergirl, alien, size difference, large breasts, muscle, multiple arms, sweat, light femdom, oral, vaginal, kissing, female ejaculation, bathing, teasing

Snek 2:
http://pastebin.com/z2wJLg7V
>XCOM Viper, lamia, monstergirl, light femdom, language barrier, size difference, large breasts, light bondage, oral, kissing, boobjob, handjob, orgasm denial, teasing, vaginal

Pinwheel:
http://pastebin.com/gKNTw6pr
>monstergirl, alien, size difference, muscle, sweat, femdom, dubious consent, oral, orgasm denial, kissing, biting, handjob, light bondage, vaginal, hair pulling, 69, face sitting

Splashdown (ongoing):
http://pastebin.com/22tbp4XP
>light bondage, sweat, reverse rape, femdom, biting, licking, scratching, rough sex, oral, female ejaculation, hair pulling, tail job, kissing, orgasm denial, blowjob

I also have free Ebooks for Pinwheel, Snek and Crashland available for download on my Patreon in epub format if you want a nicer reading experience:

Snek 1 & 2: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6647983&i=548925
Crashland: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6584455&i=535529
Pinwheel: https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6611423&i=541149

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Reposting my stuff:

Lock, Croc and Two Smoking Barrels: Chapters 1-25:

Latest chapter: Croc is Dead
http://pastebin.com/n7wZkdNU

>Tags: croc-girl, sex, nudity, public nudity, exhibitionism, mild humiliation, cunnilingus, breath play, consensual, lovey-dovey, silly, violence, menace, animal death, Florida.

Out of the Bag: As Suggested by Anon
http://pastebin.com/69PdJVLf

> Tags: catgirls, transformation, full-moon, public nudity, yuri, kissing, cunnilingus, exhibitionism, alarmingly realistic catgirls, pizza

I'm almost done with the croc story, so I'd be open to something new.

Not reposting my stuff.

In lieu of a /d/ecent literature thread here, I'll post my stuff here again. There's a lot of new content, so I'll just post all the 4 links to the work.

>Sci-Fi
>Hyper
>Futa
>Cock/Breast Milking
>Multi (brest/cock/limb)

http://www.furaffinity.net/view/20643494/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/20765400/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/20893730/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/21036353/

>>7011835

Source of OP's pic or artist?

OP, don't jump the gun next time. Wait for the previous thread to 404 so it can be archived properly.

>>7011919
Not the OP, but it archives automatically since the first post of any thread. Even deleted threads get archived You really don't understand how the archive works.

>>7011922
Sorry, it's just an old habit.

>>7011874
Did you miss the URL in the bottom right corner?

I'd like to request a story set in a D&D style fantasy world. But the tieflings of this setting didn't develop from human/demon origins, they came from halfling/demon ones. I like the idea of calling them imps or implings.
Anyway, they're very gifted magically and the story in question follows a female imp who is trying to get a position as a court mage.
But the other competitors for the position, elves and old human wizards and such, appear much more appealing to the noble holding auditions.

So she decides to seduce the judge.

Need a writing tip.

When writing, do you conceptualize the sex scenes and then work outward from there, or do you create as you go and organically write the sex scenes when you get to them?

>>7011984
Personally I go with option 2. I find that it helps me get to the know the characters, which in turn helps me figure out what they'd do in bed.
But I can definitely see the first option working for people, especially if they're like me and have trouble doing opening scenes.

>>7011984
Personally I don't think a story that is just sex has any staying power, wank material is no different from a regular story, it needs characters with arcs and development, a plot with a beginning, middle and end, and a world with enough detail that people can feel immersed.
That doesn't mean it has to be long, or complex, but I think if you try to write a story around the sex scenes as opposed to writing sex scenes into your story it will turn out worse.

>>7011993

I have to agree and this is the part I feel I need to work on the most.

Here's a good question, if you have ever had sex (can't shame you for being a virgin on this board especially, but srsly bruh, if you haven't done it yet, get laid), did you plan what the experience was going to be like? I mean, granted there has to be *some* planning involved if you're into that BDSM stuff or if you're trying to do something special, but the fact of the matter is that Sex is an activity all about feeling. You don't bang someone you're not attracted to, and you won't form a relationship with someone that you don't love.

What this eventually sums up to is feeling. If you're not getting a boner from letting your characters organically doing their thing, there's a good chance that you're doing it wrong.

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>>7011835
Enjoy the new chapters /d/eviants
tags
m/f, femdom, mind melding, 40K, mutant

http://pastebin.com/YHqg02rG

How to get started writing?

>>7012116
by just writing

>>7012118
You sir are a genius. There is no way that crossed my mind.

>>7012129
I'm not even joking. If you want to get good at something you need to practice it.

>>7012135
>>7012116
Truth, its slow at first and your first writing projects are going to be shit. It takes a while to get good at it, or even halfway decent.

Its writefag who wrote this by the way
>>7012039

Don't think I hold myself in high regard, I'm posting smut on an anonymous message board, I don't exactly have a high title here, but characters and conversations in my opinion are best based off of real world experience.

>>7012135
>>7012144
But I quit halfway through because my first projects are shit. Lose all motivation to try again for about half a year and the cycle repeats.

>>7012156
And you're literally the only one who can change that. Have some fucking conviction and dedication or you'll never improve.

>>7012156

Hah I know this feeling too well. I'll get inspired to write and hammer out a story only to gas out half way through the editing and refining of the work.

Then I submit a half done project because I want to see some kind of reaction or even get some outside help to complete it.

But the biggest thing is that you need to keep working at it and don't get down on yourself. Every time I dedicate my time to writing I can see myself getting a little bit better and I grow a little more as a writer.

>>7012158
>>7012162
But how do I improve when I struggle? It is when I am writing that I have problems.

I have a general idea of what I want to do and where and how I wanna proceed but then when it comes to a place where I think description should be; I get stuck thinking about how it should be described and how much description if there even should be any, should there be. I'm not good with detail.

>>7012167

Keep writing, das it mane.

>>7012173

Oh, and, uh, reading helps too. I'd honestly get yourself some very long-winded Mark Twain stuff (he'll wax eloquent on bullshit for pages) and then contrast that with some Foundation by Asimov (who somehow gets the job done with hardly any descriptions at all).

>>7012173
>>7012178
Okay

>>7012167
>>7012178
Find your inspiration
Mine is that I need to get outside. Thats it.
I need to go outside and do something like eat lunch in a pizzeria or go swimming.

Just joined an MMA gym and getting kicked around+going home and getting drunk makes me want to write

Anything like Allyana's Fall? I've always loved slimes merging with women

>>7012188
Why?

>>7012144
>but characters and conversations in my opinion are best based off of real world experience.

I'm not sure that plays a part in it, I've not done any of the stuff I write about.

>>7012436

I suppose it also (somewhat) applies to other people you meet? I remember you posting at one point that Raz was based off of someone you knew?

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Blue slime, part 3/3, update starts at line 369: http://pastebin.com/cge4fjme

Tags for update: anal, massaging, romance, sexual naivety, bath time, gentle femdom-sorta.

Tags overall: hetero, monster girl, slime girl, oral, accidental sex, draining sex, sexual feeding, science-gone-wrong/right, soft science-fiction, really soft science-fiction, like science-fiction so soft you might as well save yourself 11 letters and call it fantasy, blatant misuse of company property.

Well, what do you think, Helpful Critiquing Physicist Guy? I might have missed the mark again when it comes to the potential of amorphous sexual partners, but at least it was better than the golems, right?

>>7012469
I'm going to read this at some point anon.

>>7012441
Kind of, I was bullied a lot in school so I drew some inspiration from that experience for Raz, in terms of the way that some bullies treat you and how they don't necessarily understand the effect they have on you and regret it when they realize.
They were all male though and there was never any sexual element to it, so she's not really based off a real person, just a common theme among bullies.

Besides that though I have no experiences relating to anything else I write about [spoiler]including the sex[/spoiler] so I don't think you necessarily need to draw from personal experience when you write.

>>7012499
Are you sure you didn't find the bullying sexual?

>>7012577
Nah because then I'd be writing Futa stories and making extremely long and detailed posts about how it's not gay.

>>7012584
I mean, clearly futa on male is gay, but what's gay about futa on female?

>>7012600
Well let's not get into what is and isn't gay, each to his own, just trying to make the point that I'm writing about entirely fictional women that aren't based on any real-world experiences.

>>7012469
I'm glad that I've been of help to you so far. I hate to see good writers stagnate from lack of feedback.

In any case, this was definitely a step in the right direction with adventurous use of anatomy. If you haven't already, I'd recommend reading Oblimo's "It's Always Time". He did an excellent job with it. Then again, that story is considerably longer than anything I've seen out of here in a long while. My only complaint is that you still tend to run short on the actual smut. Part of that probably comes from the lack of description on the female side of things. Virtually the entire focus is on the male perspective, with the minimal description of Sophie limited to her appearance. Even if she doesn't feel sexual pleasure the same way as a human, you could still go into greater detail with respect to her attitude to sex. In fact, it could be rather interesting to contrast the usual human sexual response to that of a creature who views sex as feeding. Perhaps she could have a more mechanical view of sex itself, treating it as little more than preparing food, but taking erotic enjoyment in ejaculation and after care. You started a bit down that road already with her ravenous appetite, so it would probably have fit well.

The one thing I would like to have seen more of in this story is the development of their relationship. You have an amusing origin story and a satisfactory ending, but there is little to link the two. Their relationship, as seen by the reader, consists of a rather awkward introduction, some crazy sex, a long time skip, and eventual love. What bridged that gap between Act II and Act III? It's not necessarily unrealistic as written - they act like a couple - but it would be nice to see how they went from point a to point b.

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>>7012682
>I'm glad that I've been of help to you so far.
Believe me, man, I'd attribute 80% of my improvement this past half year to you. I treasure everything you have to say, and I hope everyone else does too.

>lack of description on the female side of things.
Now that is a very good point, but it brings up the question of 'what's the best way to accommodate two perspectives within a single scene.' As I learned from your critique of my first scylla story, it's important to practice keeping perspective consistent. So, what do you think would be the best way to show two perspectives without breaking consistency? Would it be okay to have the perspective tennis balling between the two parties through strategic use of paragraph breaks? Would it work better to subtly switch to a third-person omniscient perspective when the action starts? Or maybe I should even go with a TPO perspective throughout the entire story? Definitely something I'll have to experiment with on my next piece.

>The one thing I would like to have seen more of in this story is the development of their relationship.
Honestly, I thought I thought this would just be a short, smutty exercise in slime sex, but the more I got into Sophie's origins and physiology, the more I wanted to answer that as well. Let's just say an interquel(?) isn't out of the question.

>>7012776
>Would it be okay to have the perspective tennis balling between the two parties through strategic use of paragraph breaks?

I'm trying to learn to switch perspective too with my latest story, and this is the technique I've been using. I'm starting a new paragraph when the perspective changes.

I have an update coming very soon, maybe you could have a look at how I did it and give me your opinion on whether it was effective or not?

>>7012776
While the "tennis balling" does work, it's not always appropriate and probably not necessary. You only ever see life through your own perspective, yet you (presumably) have a decent idea of how others feel. Use those kinds of cues. Most smut writers describe breath patterns, involuntary spasms, etc. to convey pleasure in the non-narrative character. Expand those kinds of descriptions and modify them to the scenario. Skin flushing, grasping hands and feet, limb abduction, and repetitive head movements are all well-established indicators of arousal and can help to describe the scene. The advice I've given before is to watch more porn and keep tabs on where your eyes go and why they are looking there. Anything your eyes dwell on is worthy of description. For men, this is commonly the face and neck, where signs of arousal are most apparent. Basically, describe what turns you on. Chances are, the rest of us will like the same things.

That being said, I have absolutely no idea what to do in the specific case of this story. I've never tried to write about foodgasms before, so I'm totally lost on that one. I'm sure that there's some irrationally smutty gokkun porn out there that could serve as inspiration.

>>7012782
Sure, bud.

>>7012819
Solid gold advice. I think I did a tiny bit of that in my harpy story, so it's nice to know I'm not completely off the right track. I'll just have to make sure and expand on that come my next sex scene. As for how to do that with a slime... well, that's what research is for, I guess. I'll check out Oblimo.

>repetitive head movements
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K5G1FmU-ldg

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Update, new content starts at "Zhari crawled up on top of McGregor".

Splashdown (ongoing):
http://pastebin.com/22tbp4XP
>light bondage, sweat, reverse rape, femdom, biting, licking, scratching, rough sex, oral, female ejaculation, hair pulling, tail job, kissing, orgasm denial, blowjob, vaginal

Tell me what you guys think of where the scene is going, and who you'd like to see come out on top, not 100% sure on where I want to take it yet.

>>7012840
Cool, maybe between us we can find the best technique.
This is my first attempt at writing from the female PoV, and in third person too, trying to shake things up, any feedback is appreciated.

>>7012419

absorption/merging fetish.

This IS /d/, right?

>>7012600
What about male on futa?

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>>7012469
oh man
this was gr8

slimes are perfect for light bondage/ gfd

>>7012600
>clearly futa on male is gay
clearly?
literally no one into futa identifies as being gay
is pegging gay too?
does getting rimmed by a girl make you gay?

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>>7012469
Took me a while to read, nice job on the length.
I think you nailed Sophie being cute where it could very easily have become cringy if it hadn't been handled so well, and I feel like their relationship is believable without being too self-indulgent. The detail you put into the mechanics of the slime and how it works is great too.
I do agree with >>7012682
I feel like the sex scenes need to be more descriptive, but besides that it's pretty spot-on, good job.

>>7013024
>>7012600
Can we please not get into this argument? Its as old as the fetish itself and neither side will ever give ground. Let's just agree to tolerate and/or ignore the issue like adults and move on.

>>7013049
It's also not a popular fetish in this general.

>>7013049

But then that'd suck all the fun out of arguing!

>>7012930

I'm not going to suggest shit on where I think it's going, I'm just glad to be along for the ride. Splashdown is one of my new favorites.

>>7012930
>>7013047
Well, I could certainly learn a thing or two from you when it comes to description, and I think you handled that method of dual-perspective successfully. I think I'll stick with HCPG's suggestion for my next short, though, just to test it out and compare, you know.

Other than that: solid prose, neat premise, and interesting enough to warrant a read-through of the entire thing when it's ready.

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>>7013087
Yeah that's a good idea I'd like to see how that turns out and compare it.

To elaborate on the description thing, in my opinion if you were more descriptive of what was happening anatomically, in terms of like what the characters are feeling and what is happening to their bodies, it would be more immersive.

So for example when you described the slime morphing into eight tongues as it kisses him (which I really dug), go into more detail about how that feels in his mouth. What is the sensation like, how does it taste, are the movements fast or slow? Describe the texture of the tongues, things like that, but also how it makes him feel. Is it placating, does it excite him, how does it effect him?

That alone can be a whole scene if you stretch it out a bit, because the idea is great, but as the reader I want to know exactly how that feels to the MC.

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>>7012930
i gotta get to bed
looking forward to reading this tomorrow though

>>7013132
big meaty paws

>>7013132
Great pic, who's the artist?

>>7013135
no idea
but it has (slight) size difference AND ear biting, so i had to save it.

reverse image search for it

>>7012930
>that update
Splashdown might overtake Crashland as my favorite story.

>>7012776
Paragraph switches would be essential for a perspective swap, same as with changes in speaker for dialogue. Making it clear the viewpoint character has changed and who it has changed to is generally a simple matter of including some relevant pronouns, proper names, allusions to distinctive worldviews etc. This should make the swap pretty effortless on the part of the reader without relying on clunky specification of OKAY NOW IT'S THIS PERSON which can disrupt the flow of the scene.
The real trick is swapping at appropriate beats in the scene, though that's mostly a matter of don't swap perspective until after you've understood the current viewpoint character's feelings and perspectives on the latest immediate development, or else the reader may feel frustrated being torn away to the other character. As long as you avoid doing that (except occasions where you may actively want a little suspense over their immediate reaction) you can generally switch about as you like.

>>7013236

Poster of >>7011872

Yeah, I've actually been using a tilde "~" to denote switches between perspective and time recently, and that seems to be working out pretty well. Of course, there is never an excuse for a transition that comes too quickly, but signaling to the reader that time has elapsed or we are in the head of another character is crucial.

>>7013264
something like a row of tildes is usually pretty good to indicate scene changes like the passage of time, though in a lot of professional fiction it's preferred that things like that get signposted in the text, e.g. if a significant battle has been being planned and referred to as being a month off and the next paragraph opens with "on the morning of the assault", or open with a character reflecting on progress, delays or activities they have done during the skip, which naturally lends itself to communicating the scope of the jump.
ideally a change of character perspective should also be possible purely through the text or the content of the viewpoint character's attendant narration whether first or third person, but it can be more challenging if you want a scene to move between viewpoints and are unused to writing that sort of thing. you don't exactly have the leeway to use a dedicated sentence or brief paragraph to convey the transition the way you usually do with something like a timeskip.

>>7013322

Oh sure, I mean, I still make it abundantly clear (eventually) that perspective or time has changed, I honestly just like to explore more creative methods of changes rather than just the "On the morning of X event" or something I like that. I honestly just feel transitions like that are lazy, you know?

What I mean is, I can use the tilde to signal the change, then show the reader that something has changed rather than just telling them. Basically because while telling them works, I just can't shake the feeling that it's lazy as all hell.

I have a request for a story in which a florist has a romance with the dryad who comes into the shop to get her "hair" done (treating the florist like a barber). A modern fantasy setting would work well for it, I think, and it might be fun to have something like an orc or tiefling as the male florist.
If it's not too much like the grumpy orc and horny elf girl comic, I'd kind of like the florist to be a bit dense and unresponsive to the dryad's advances. At least at first.

If anyone is willing to write this I would be very grateful.

>>7013331
apologies; I was giving a lazy example for convenience's sake. to clarify, what's really desired is for the change to be signalled invisibly by the sentence structure and word choice, or to be so inherently obvious from the event being described from the get go in this new paragraph that the reader will understand the transition unconsciously, such that adding in the tilde would be completely redundant/superfluous and just make things clunkier to read by interrupting the already completely clear narrative. the goal is that you should never have to drop outside of purely telling the story to signal something to the reader, even for a single line with some nonstandard punctuation like ~ or *** on it. for professionally edited work, that's considered a copout equivalent to writing CHANGE OF PERPECTIVE on the line, since the reader rapidly works out that this is what it mechanically means, and the fact that it's a symbol is just a matter of specialized abbreviation in the same way that # is frequently a symbolic abbreviation for number.

>>7012930
I'm leaning more of a stalemate for their first encounter and her "winning" out in the end. Maybe have McGregor have a bit of dom fetish? Or is that too cliche? I'd wait for some more feedback.

>>7012930
they both vocalize their submission at the same time (during climax)
awkward silence ensues

what's the bet that bay the time they leave their sex cave, the mission has already been completed by a secondary team?

>>7013787
Better yet, they get found the next day snuggling together by a secondary team, and McGregor feigns that she's just beaten him up to save her social standing.

Or he succeeds in domming her, feigns subservience, then they have a secret relationship wherein she's the sub unbeknownst to her fellow Borealans.

>>7011845


Snekguy, how much cash do I need to throw at you until Snek 3 happens?

That shit is like crack and I need more of it.

>>7012934
Yes, but I was wondering what about those things specifically it was that you found so addictive.

For research purposes.

>>7012469
>no slime gf to tease you about liking buttstuff and having sensitive nipples
jdimsa

>tfw you use the snowflake method to write a novella and realize you've still got miles to go with your writing.

Quality Assurance: http://pastebin.com/EE5D8yNk

http://convolutedplot.deviantart.com/art/Quality-Assurance-632834477

>Bodysuit, Skinsuit, TG, Possession

Not the kind of story I've really seen around these parts, so hopefully you like it. I'm looking for feedback of all kinds, since this was blitzed all in one go during an all nighter so I haven't really done a lot of redrafting or refinement.

Pic related

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>>7013811
If you're offering, I have a Patreon if you want to drop a buck or two (/Snekguy), I can start work on Snek 3 after Splashdown is done.
Feel free to PM me any requests or suggestions you have, I'm kind of out of ideas for that series but I'm happy to write another one if I can get a story together.

So, I just finished posting the last chapter of my latest story, Omelas 2: Stolen Sacrifice over at https://tsade.com/nine-sisters/omelas/omelas-02/

forced birthing, tentacles, MMF, anal, oral, tort, size, magic

I'm also in the process of editing my transgender novel (also fantasy), Derik's Luck, thanks to folks over on my Patreon (/tsade) and working on Puppy Mill 2 (amputee, fantasy, ws, oral, anal, magic, size, rp, nc, cons, rom, bd, mc, tent, best, fist... need to finish to figure out the rest of the tags), that is patrons but I'm going to probably start serializing them on a weekly basis starting next week(?)

Hopefully, I'll get a short story out soon too. :)

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>>7014063
I like it!

>>7014063
>Quality
That was a fun story. The only thing I saw off-hand was spelling out numbers under a hundred (Three days... instead of 3 days).

>tfw all these stories left to read

Aspiring amazon fag here, is it okay to refer to young women as "girls"?
Being vat grown catgirls their age is indeterminable but I'm not writing pedoficion.
I'm worried that combining the word "girls" with the anime art cover will confuse people though.

>>7014155
The rule for all publishing houses is you spell out numbers from one to nine, and numbers above that are written with numerals (so 10, 11, 12...). Many publishers also require ten, rather than 10.
Some style guides require you to write out all numbers up to one hundred, others only require up to ten and then require single-word numbers to be written out (so, you write 28 and thirty, but NOT twenty eight and 30).

Usually the only places where you would be permitted to use 3 instead of three are in tables of numeric data or in-line equations or statements of measurement values in technical or journalistic writing, so you would write for example "there were three cubes, each weighing 3 kg".

>>7014334
This is incredibly useful information, I'm not that anon but thankyou.

>>7014180
Yeah, that's not an uncommon usage where "women" sounds too proper and "young women" sounds too formal. The same often applies for using "boys" instead of "young men", which can sound a bit too stuffy for fiction, though guys is also commonly used in that situation.

>>7014334
The exception to these rules is that you cannot, under any circumstance, start a sentence with a numeral. If you end up doing doing so and cannot spell out the number, rewrite the sentence so the numeral is not at the beginning.

>>7014334
>>7014350
What if you write someone counting? As in say they're playing hide and seek, where the seeker has to count to a hundred or beyond.

>>7014350
True.

>>7014357
For direct speech, you usually write out the numbers because that best evokes the sense of it being spoken aloud, even if elsewhere you only spell things out up to ten. You would swap back to numerals when the number starts getting cumbersome to write out in full, but then most people would naturally switch over to approximations that take less time to say. Sometimes sticking with spelling it out can be used to ram home that someone is being very precise, and so the number is taking a long time to state.

Fiction and humanities writing tends to expect you to spell out numbers up to one hundred throughout the text including outside direct speech; one example would be the OUP house style, where sciences use the rule one to ten, then 11, 12..., while humanities are one to ninety-nine, then 100, 101...
Also notable is that some publishers (OUP included) require you to hyphenate compound numbers (so twenty-five, NOT twenty five)

>>7014357
I'm assuming you would be cutting back to the hider and the seeker rather than showing the seeker actually count out 100+ numbers.
I'd do it like this:

"One!" came the small voice as Susy began her count. "Two! Three! Four!" David took a moment to make sure she was keeping her eyes buried behind her fingers before dashing off to find a good place to hide.

The pair had decided the garage was out of bounds, but they said nothing about hiding near it. Glancing over his shoulder to make sure Susy was still playing fair, the faint sound of, "20, 21, 22," echoing from her still form, David did his best to pull the trash bins quietly onto the driveway. He positioned them together like a wall, then crouched down behind their bulk.

In the distance, little Susy was still counting away. David smiled as her numbers started to falter.

"Uh, 56! And 57, 58, and 55! No, wait, uh, 60!"

>>7014357
>>7014382
This is good if you don't like spelling out numbers beyond nine or ten, all I would add is that generally speaking you don't want to change from words to numerals in a single piece of direct speech as the transition can feel clunky. "...eight, nine, 10, 11..." would usually be considered bad form, for example.

Is there a compendium of terms for sex organs that aren't just cock and balls?

I need a way to say clitoris without referring to clitoris and I think the term rose bud is gross.

>>7014388
Indeed.

Personally, I'm a proponent of spelling out any number that can be written in one or two words -- Eight, twenty-five, four billion, etc. -- and using numerals for anything more complicated. Five billion eighty-eight, for example, is just too unwieldy.

>>7014395
Yes. Many.
https://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=1006012102044

>>7014401
>Yes. Many.
Those are mostly shithouse, I was thinking a porn fiction fit for /d/

>>7014395
Here's a few http://onlineslangdictionary.com/thesaurus/words+meaning+clitoris.html

There generally aren't that many for the clit specifically, so you could just make it up. Take a noun and form the sentence around it so people can refer from context.

Like...

''He encircled his lip around her pink nob.''

People'll know what you're talking about.

>>7014396
That's where I'd usually fall for something like fiction, unless as mentioned earlier I wanted to emphasise how a character was taking the time to say something like "five billion and eighty-eight" rather than approximating to just "five billion" or "about five billion", which is what most people do in natural speech. Anything particularly unwieldy to write out longhand is usually getting similarly unwieldy to say.

>>7013819

because feeling pleasure everywhere during sex must be mindblowing.

>>7012930
> Think you might have finally done a story with hard core domming by the girl, full on dom/sub
> Turns into "girl gets all weak at the knees and her true submissive nature comes out and the guy takes control"
God damn it Snek, I love your work so much, why you gotta blueball me like this?

>>7014451
So far she's not become submissive
Getting weak at the knees is just a natural side effect of cumming buckets

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>>7013056
>>7013132
>>7013141
>>7013621
>>7013787
DONE! Thanks for the feedback and ideas guys.

3000 word update, new content starts at "She wasn't going to give in without a fight"
Final word count is 19,427, also the longest sex scene I've ever written at 8,630 words.

Splashdown:
http://pastebin.com/22tbp4XP
>light bondage, sweat, reverse rape, femdom, biting, licking, scratching, rough sex, oral, female ejaculation, hair pulling, tail job, kissing, orgasm denial, blowjob, vaginal, creampie, doggystyle

>>7014451
>>7014487
It's hard to please everyone, I feel like this was right for the characters and their dynamic and I wanted to explore the whole Borealan pack dynamic from a different perspective, I hope you like the ending regardless.

>>7014395
There are basically no good terms for girl bits so you have to write around them as much as possible. It is very sad.

Well, clit isn't so terrible, but I assume you don't want that.

>>7014395
Personally I try to describe them so people get the idea without stating what they are.
For example rather than clitoris I will say "her engorged protrusion" and then they know what it is without me having to use gross anatomical terms, because every word used to describe the vagina sounds horrible.

>>7014395

Here's a good idea... get creative. Like some other people have been stating, descriptive words are better than words than anatomically correct words.

You know about the spanish word for testes? It's huevos, which literally translates to eggs. Why? Because balls look like eggs, that's why. So, I'd just make something up that makes it abundantly clear to the reader so that they know what they are talking about. I mean, I think a clit looks like an eraser (like the one on a pencil) but calling the clit an eraser is just corny as fuck. You get what I mean?

>>7014504
Great finish. Any ideas about your next story?

>>7014504
Did you draw this snekguy?

>>7014512
>>7014523
>>7014508
I've just accepted that I'll have to use a term I hate as little as possible.

>>7014556
I'm not sure, I was gonna either deviate a bit from my scifi theme and do a story where an Ork warband made up of females captures a human, or someone requested Snek 3 but I'm not sure how that would go yet, I'd have to brainstorm.

>>7014568
Nah, I wish I could draw like that.

>>7014572
>Ork warband made up of females captures a human
that sounds great!
Maybe do something like that with Betelgeusians?

>>7014585
opps ment the cat ones oh well

>>7014572
I've always preferred sci-fi over medieval/fantasy, but I understand that a writers gotta branch out.

Personally I'd like to see a human sent far from Earth to the Borelean homeworld on a diplomatic mission. Between the culture shock and the high-ranking(alpha) Boreleans prodding for weakness, I think there would be tons of content there.

>>7014572
Sounds interesting. I'll be looking forward to whatever you end up producing.

>>7014589
Honestly I don't know shit about D&D so that's one of the reasons I avoid writing fantasy, so as not incur the wrath of the aspies.
I've never liked 40K erotica, seems out of place to me, like besides the Slaanesh stuff 40K is almost innocent in its violent simplicity. I've never personally applied any sexual elements to it.

>>7014591
Damn, now there's a good idea I hadn't thought of.
Kind of like the Halo Kilo-Five trilogy.
I want to take a short break from the Pinwheel universe since I wrote two in a row, but I'll definitely write that after. Great suggestion.

>>7014596
Sorry for deleting that post. Apparently I'm not awake yet because I completely misread what you said, hence my rather odd reply. I was hoping I killed my mistake before you read it.

Well, live and learn.

>>7014601
It's a valid question, no worries.

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>>7014596
Speaking of xcom 2, the berserkers are actually female too.

>>7014585
Could maybe work that theme into the Borealan homeworld suggestion, that could work.

>>7014619
What would the Borealan homeworld be and look like?

>>7014678
Well Borealans come from Alpha Coronae Borealis, which is a dual star system with a white star three times as big as the sun and a smaller yellow star orbiting it.
So I guess their homeworld has to have an oxygen atmosphere, gravity should be similar, maybe slightly higher to account for their musculature, it should be bright and hot there, I guess it would be like walking under bright fluorescent lighting. The second star would probably be visible at night.
Maybe it could have kind of an Arabian vibe?

>>7014688
Would there be the same amount of water? How much would be desert or is it full on tatooine?

>>7014694
Could be like Egypt where everything around the Nile is super fertile land so cities are built around rivers similar to that.
I think I remember hearing that planets are more likely to have one climate like in Star Wars than the huge diversity of climates like Earth has.

>>7014694
I guess it would need enough water to support a large ecosystem, which in turn could have supported the large predators Borealans evolved from. I talked about Borealans enjoying playing in water in Pinwheel too, so they would need access to water deep enough to swim in.

>>7014697
That's a good idea that solves both problems.

Do you guys use editors?
Like, is there a /d/ regular who are willing to perform the service?

>>7014735
Nah, I wish I had an editor, I cringe when obvious spelling mistakes or typos get through that I somehow missed, especially on SOL because they don't let you edit stories.

>>7014735
I've actually been thinking of offering my services for something like that, but I'm worried about getting too many requests since we have so many authors. I'd like to avoid promising more than I can deliver.

>>7014700
How mountainous is the planet?

>>7014765
I would say not very.
Are you making it in Space Engine or something?

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>>7014769

>>7014769
Its Grand Designer

>>7014798
Dude that is sick.
I'll have to check that game out.
If you got me a shot of it without the red line through it I could use that as the thumbnail for the story on sites that allow it, with your permission.

>>7014735
I (apparently now dubbed HCPG) have worked as an editor for quite a few people here. I'm always willing to edit, though my turn-around is generally no faster than a few days.

>>7014824
Thanks still working on it. That's why I needed the info.
>If you got me a shot of it without the red line through it I could use that as the thumbnail for the story on sites that allow it, with your permission
Shure ^w^ What size do you want it? I can go up to 8k. 16k would take awhile

>>7014832
How about 1080p? I could set it as my wallpaper too, to keep me motivated.
With your permission I could even set that as the banner on my Patreon and get rid of the ugly ass public domain Hubble shit I have going.

>>7014412

and just imagine it - being assimilated into a loving slime and feeling pleasure throughout your entire being.

I'd imagine the non-loving ones would be horrifying but that's something I'd leave to Grotto to write. Not shit-talking him, it seems like that's his thing.

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>>7014844
Like when you forget to turn off the vore option in MGQ.

>>7014837
Got it rendering.
>With your permission I could even set that as the banner on my Patreon
Yeah ^w^
How would you like it sent?

>>7014848
Lol know the feels

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>>7014851
If it's too big to upload here you can send it to [email protected].

Cheers m8.

>>7014858
Has been sent as .zip with two files a big and smaller one ^^

>>7014878
Thanks so much dude those are awesome.

>>7014848
I was more weirded out than anything. I cannot understand why anyone thinks that being digested is sexy or would be at all pleasurable. And then there's the fact that you would suffocate long before you begin to be digested.

>>7014894
Well if we were to list the fetishes that make no logical sense we'd be here all night.

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The Splashdown Ebook is ready in epub format for if you want to read it on your Nook or Kindle or get arrested for indecent exposure on the subway.

https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6706250&i=561366

>>7015182
Hey what kind of binary system is it? Im doing the math on it

>>7014765
>>7014798
>>7014821
>>7014824
>>7015203

>place where people who fap to weird shit can write about it
>let's discuss astrophysics and planet composition instead

Only on /d/, man. Only on /d/.

>>7015203
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alpha_Coronae_Borealis

There's a lot of math on the page to the right. I wouldn't know what to pick out for you.
Declination, eccentricity, argument of periastron(???).

I gotta go to bed but I'm eager to see what you come up with.

>tfw a girl shlicks to your writing

>>7011845
Gotta say I've been reading your stuff for the past couple weeks and your world building is great. Though the sex scenes are a little repetitive, I'm always waiting to see what you put out next.
Crashland is my favorite so far. Lizard loving its the best.
I don't have cash but hopefully I'll have some time for some fan art soon enough.

Can we get a new discord invite if it's still active?

>>7015391
kind of odd to say the sex scenes can get repetitive while citing the story that's almost 100% smut as your favorite

>>7014069


Done, you have my dollar per month.

My suggestion? The XCOM setting has so much fun potential, I'd personally prefer more story that builds up to sex, so that the sex is more special when it finally does happen.

>>7015447
Also, another suggest:

Snek smuggles him into the barracks/other extremely dangerous place for some extremely risky but exciting sexytimes. Possibly even friends/squadmates may want to join in, who knows?

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>>7014798
>>7014821
Holy shit. This could be very useful for a non /d related writing project I've got going, or any other writing projects.

I like to visually create the environments where things are happening, makes it easier to understand the space everything is moving in and keep things consistent, also helps me work on what happens as I can see what is possible and how everyone and everything is located in the space I created. I use blue prints, maps made from stones and sticks as well as photos, micro world photos are good for coming up with alien or fantastical places, but with those I can only work in a very limited scale, so this could be perfect for my work style.

I know this pabbling is kinda over sharing, but I think it would be interesting to know, how others on here create their stories. Does anybody else use any aids?

Pic sorta related, it's the type of weird photo I use to build from.

>>7014894
That japanese guy who ate those french chicks said it started when his grandma or someone like that would pretend to eat him and his siblings when they were kids..
So fucked up during childhood, though that's probably how most of the weirdos get made.

>>7014504
Hot!

Fun question time: when you read dramatic parts of your story in your head, whose voice do you use to test and see if it sounds ridiculous or not?

Mine's a toss-up between:
Old man Cash: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k9IfHDi-2EA
And Richard Burton: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BgIuUyAUxaw

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>>7015391
I'm glad you're enjoying them, I'm trying to keep up the pace.
Yeah, sex by it's nature is repetitious, if there's a way to make every scene novel I've not discovered it yet, I just try to find new ways to describe them.

>>7015447
Thanks man! I appreciate it.
So my game plan is Snek 3 next, then a story where I'm thinking an aspiring politician takes a job at the new UNN embassy on Borealis and gets waaaaay more than he bargained for.

>>7015450
So you're thinking some group stuff? That's not something I've done yet, could be interesting. We talking about the same MC and the same Viper, or new characters?
How hard are we going? /gfd/ like the other two stories or more Splashdown rapey?

>>7015643
>>7014596
So because of the two sun's orbit cause a eclipse for about 4-ish days out of its 17 day orbit for the two suns.

1st 4 days normal
2ed 4 days slight change nothing noticable
3rd 4 days normal
4th 4 days so cold the smaller star would be the only source of light and would be 4 au outside of the habitable zone the diffrence would be like if the earth was put where jupitur is and would be past the frostline 0-0 This would make it a Hoth like planet for about a work week.

This could make for some interesting story situations and this could heavenly influence the planets culture

>>7015214
I just did astrophysics to justify cuddling

>>7015710

>I just did astrophysics to justify cuddling

Out of context, that sentence is hilarious. I hope you know that.

>>7015411
What can I say? I have a thing for four armed lizards. I like them all but the concept that he wrote about in that particular story is my favorite.

>>7015714
I'm glad I can make people laugh

>>7015710
With this info you can really star to worldbuild since most of the data is the same as earth for the most part.
Since it was mentioned that the planet of the Borealans is the same or bigger I chose the radius to be 1.1 of earth's.
If you give it a mass of 1.8 of earths you can calculate the gravity. Which would be around 1.64Gs.
This would make them about 60% stronger then a human in a normal earth gravity of 1G. Humans on this planet would be greatly affected about 60% of their original strength could be used.

The four day's cold cycle in 17-ish days would make creatures to have burrow into the ground or have a shelter to survive. You could have a creature in the ground and when it starts to get cold it open its home for all the prey

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>>7015710
>>7015728
That's good info, thanks.
Opens up all kinds of ideas.
Perhaps the 4 cold days could make the Borealans really sluggish and uncharacteristically cuddly, perhaps the packs kind of hibernate or go into a low metabolic state and all huddle together in a pile, then when it gets hot again they go back to being assholes.

>I just did astrophysics to justify cuddling

Quote of the week.

>>7015750
Based on where they are could affect lots of things too. Like in the northern areas they could be really fluffy like a persian
<< imo ^ best for cuddling
or if they are from the equator they would have thinner fur

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>>7015643
>I'm thinking an aspiring politician takes a job at the new UNN embassy on Borealis and gets waaaaay more than he bargained for.

>he thought it was a promotion
>he only got it because no one else wanted the job

>>7015728
The higher gravity could explain why the Borealans are slightly behind Humanity in space tech. Due to our gravity and atmospheric pressure, Earth had to make the massive Saturn V rocket just to place a tiny lander on the Moon.

Meanwhile, a planet with a gravitational field 1.8x stronger than Earth would be extremely difficult to launch early spacecraft using traditional engines and possibly result in the population at that time putting less priority in their first space program due to its impracticality and expense.

the 1.8 would be only applicable if the content of the planet was the exact same as ours since there's so much dessert I used numbers with a much higher silicate content with is why 1.8 earth masses does not mean 1.8x stronger gravity also there iron age would be almost non existent because of the sands its really hard to build there

>>7015710
Why would anything live there?

>>7015811
If it's that deserty, how does the temperature remain stable enough for life to evolve? You need a good amount of water for that, and if you have that much water, it's not going to be that deserty.

>>7015807
The heat from the planet would be able to not have everything die and would take awhile for all the heat to dissipate. Anything that has an underground shelter(cave, burrow,...) or would have a really insulated house would be more likely.
The life question the major bodies of water would freeze over but under them would be fine. Its like how fish can survive a lake being frozen over.

Do you guys ever get stuck into a story only to realize it's not that interesting?
I'm half way through act one at the moment and I've realized the premise has no drama attached to it what so ever.

Do I just surrender and move on or power through?

>>7015836
Do you think it's gonna be dull through out or is there just a bit that you need to work through before it gets good again?

If you think there's no hope, maybe leave it at least for now, if you don't delete what you've got so far you can always return to it later.

If you think there's still something there you could jump ahead in the story and return once you know how to make the part you're at least readable.

Could also just salvage the good bits for a different story.

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>>7015811
If we set the mass as about 1.4Gs I feel like that's more reasonable, gives the Borealans more muscle mass than a human, but lets the humans walk around on Borealis without terrible discomfort.

>>7015828
Someone came up with a Nile style environment which I thought was pretty cool.
So you have very large rivers and bodies of water that life clusters around, you'd have large belts of greenery that grow more sparse as you move away from the water source, eventually becoming desert.

The fertile crescent on Earth was basically that kind of environment which is where agriculture and civilization developed first.

>>7015833
All of the plants could be evergreen style instead of tropical to cope with the cold, that would be an interesting contrast with the desert environment.

>>7015866
I don't know how hard science you want it but I find that if I develop a world and write it down like a cheat sheet off to the side then I have a framework to have a consistent story. You may never bring up how much earth radius is or the mass compared to the planet but having that info helps. I assume it is not in hard science so you can fudge the numbers.

The plants would be cool ^^ any tall planets would be cold resistant plus near water and short plants would be covered by the snow so they would be insulated from the cold so they could be of the warm variety.

>>7015842
I think it might stay dull right through the first act, it's more that I don't have an over all issue that needs to be dealt with.
Right now it's a survival horror that's about surviving a vague robotic threat but I don't want to kill off my main cast yet.

>>7015866
Higher gravity means shorter races.

Also, going from 80 to 112 would like, incapacitate most people, you wouldn't be able to carry anything around.

Spending a week there would probably destroy you unless you had an exoskeleton.

>>7015879
I would recommend writing the first act roughly, so you sort of know what happens and getting back to it once you can make it interesting. In the mean while work on the rest of the story, as you write the characters and the world you'll get a feel for what's what and it'll be easier to get the first act right.

At least that's what I would do.

>>7015881
>Higher gravity means shorter races.
Not necessarily, if humans were to live there they would become shorter over generations, like Jinxians from Larry Niven's Known Space.
Borealans evolved from large predators though, they'd have denser bones and more muscle mass to compensate for the gravity, but they wouldn't necessarily be short, and they may infact be much smaller than the creatures they evolved from.
I've never described them as lanky, they're very dense and stocky, I think they're suited to high gravity.

>Spending a week there would probably destroy you unless you had an exoskeleton.
It would be an adjustment, and living there long term would fucking destroy your joints, but I figure they'd rotate out human personnel, both because of the gravity and the stress of working with that many Borealans.
I'm not sure about the gravity though, maybe having a little lower would be more appropriate.

>>7015876
Yeah I guess not too hard, this is all a vehicle for smut after all lol.
But having it be believable adds to the immersion.

>>7015881
I believe that the suspension of disbelief would be an apt argument here

The info provided I just wanted to help in the process of world building so its not "its like earth but different"

>>7015908
I agree immersion is good \^w^/
You may not know whats possible but by defining what is it you can find out whats not possible

>>7015914
I guess I'll start writing the new Borealis story then, while I wait for more input on what people want from Snek 3.

>>7015922
Soldiers in XCOM 2 can get left behind in an operation and have to be rescued later.
>rookie can't get to evac in time
>watches hopelessly as the skyranger is forced to leave without him
>panics (typical rookie)
>gets captured by ADVENT
>put into small cell in the city
>after several days they only bother to have one guard near his cell because they've determined he's a low threat
>it's a snek

Anyone here ever done or read any stories involving reincarnation? I suppose it's kind of a weird concept to work into a smut story but it really interests me as a sort of subset of age regression and (to an extent) body-swapping/possession.

I had a couple ideas for some stories I might do that work it into the plot, but I was curious what others thought about it.

>>7015949
You're on 4chan anon, we all know what you're talking about.
33 year old neets reliving their childhood and banging a classroom full of sluts is a common theme.

Where I live the legality of possession is really fucking vague so I won't risk writing and uploading one myself.

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I'd like to request someone write a story for this image.

>>7011835
Is there anymore images from OP's set?

>>7015949
I did read this one comic a looooong time ago on /b/ or /d/

>AD 79, Pompeii
>Vesuvius erupts, entombing city with ash
>Including a massively-hung Centurion and his favorite huge-titted, wide-hipped concubine
************************
>Today
>Boy and Girl visit ruins
>Discover the ancient couple's secret hideaway
>Disturb the souls of centurion and his whore trapped within the ashes
>Souls merge with boy and girl, taking on the couple's hypertrophic forms and some of their facial features
>Fully Reincarnated, emminent fucking
>The End

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>>7015941
Ok I think I have a plot in mind, just tell me how hardcore you guys want this to be on a scale of love to rape.
Here's our protagonist, pulled from my character pool lol.

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Warhammer re-request. I need more warhammer smut


Start with a Sister at mass, hearing how the marines are descended from the Emperor (he made the Primarchs from his flesh, and the marines from Primarch flesh), then her growing lust would come from her seeing more and more of the Emperor in them.

From starting to notice how hot the Space Marines she works with are, to trying to sneak a peak in the showers, to not wearing underwear and hoping they notice, etc.


Also feel free to link me to any previously written stuff.

>>7015974
I would also like to request something for this, demon lust is the best lust but I can't fap to my own writing.

>>7015989
Fuck it. I'll give it a shot.

You deserve a word of warning, however: I'm a slow writer.

BTW, what are your thoughts on shota? I have an idea for her to lust for regular marines, but ends up going at it with one of their aspirants.

>>7016000
I was thinking more along the lines of "small SOB becoming cock sleeve for magnum-donged space marines"

But I'm just really grateful you're writing it so you can do whatever you want with it and I'll still be happy.

>>7015989
>I need more warhammer smut
So, Battle Fantasy?

Otherwise, maybe your favourite units getting squatted?

>>7016021
>Battle Fantasy
Link? All I can find with searching is flash games.

>>7015866
Worldbuilding is my fetish, so I really want you to get this right. Have some smut:
https://wikis.engrade.com/desertsoftheworld/desert-formation

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>>7016033
Yeah I'm definitely gonna take my time on that one and properly explore the planet and culture, I promised to do the Snek story first but that doesn't have to be like a 30k one.

Sneak preview.
Fineprint:
http://pastebin.com/k411SZV2

Now to get to work on Snek 3!
If only I had a conjoined twin I could write twice as much.

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>>7016044
>average trip to Borealis for a human

>>7016050
That seems so relevant.

I haven't kept up with the story but what's the chances that cat woman having a lithe younger sister who wants to fug mc as well?

>>7016053
Each species interacting with the young of the other could be pretty cute interesting.
>Borealan kittens are probably adorable
>an adult Borealan trying to be even more careful with a young human because they are even more fragile than adult humans and/or being extra protective of them

>>7016050
>>7016057
Ok, the Ambassador being harassed by horribly violent and aggressive Borealan kittens the size of fat toddlers is definitely going in there.

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>>7016068
Borealan kids are probably closer in appearance to the Thundercats Wilykids.

>>7016058
If you don't delete that, the janitors will. We may toe the line here quite a bit, but that is pretty obviously furry.

>>7016114
What do you mean? Is there like some kind of limit?

>>7016123
Furry images will get you banned on pretty much all boards. 4chan has been like this since it was pretty much made even though a lot of site likes furry porn.

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>>7016123
Yes, fur shit is B& on most boards because furfuckers can't keep it under control.

Catgirl posting is always such a rush as a result.

>>7016137
well it says it cant be deleated

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>>7016123
Yeah, even on /d/ furry isn't allowed, but you can post catgirls, monstergirls, and anything that is more ambiguous really.

>>7016140
I wouldn't worry about it bro, no one reports things in these threads anyway.

>>7016146
Yeah, that would hypocritical given the history and love of monsters/alien/etc that this general has

>>7016143
Is there even like a ratio of what is or isn't?
Mostly I just found it and thought the sis cat and dialog fit

>>7016150
if it's got a human face it's (probably) fine.
if it's got an animal face it's furry.

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>>7016150
It's kind of up to the mods to decide, but generally if the body isn't totally covered in fur and it doesn't have an animal snout, you're good.

>>7016150
>>7016153
Nice to have the clarification

My work on Chyoa:

Voluntary Slavery, Group, Exhibitionism, BDSM, Watersports etc.
https://chyoa.com/story/College-Housepet.8703

All of the above, plus incest, impregnation and breast milk
https://chyoa.com/chapter/See-if-there-are-any-other-early-risers.197673

Bit tame in setting by /d/ standards I know but theres a lot there and would appreciate any feedback

>>7016154
You can post furriest story, but it's the images you just have to be careful of.

>>7016068
I was hoping that it would be more like a younger sister the marines room mate is insecure about because she's so much more attractive by conventional human standards.

>>7015973
>Where I live the legality of possession is really fucking vague
Do you mean stuff that toes the line of underage or is it something to do with the presumed lack of consent in those stories and pics? Can't imagine there's literally just a law that says possession porn is illegal.

>>7015984
That sounds vaguely familiar for some reason but I don't think I've read it, I'll have to track it down cause it sounds really good.

>>7016168
There's many places where possession of porn is illegal, it's an age thing as well as a representation of consent.

Essentially the gubberment reserves the right to nail your ass for quotas/ soccer mom points in an election year.

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>>7016165
Nah no marines in this one, it's gonna be a civilian bureaucrat having to deal with trying to maintain an embassy on the homeworld.
I can certainly try and work that idea in though, there will be Borelans of all ages, and I guess I'll have to put some males in there too or people will start asking hard questions.

>>7015941
>>7015447
Alright, first 2000 words of Snek 3 as promised:
http://pastebin.com/SHF1Xmda

I'll have more for you tomorrow.
Could really use some input on how hard you guys want the sex scenes to be too.

>>7016153
>divided thighs on a snek
Disgusting.

>>7015973
What country?

>>7016200
It does seem unnecessary.

>>7016201
Straya.

>>7016200
What's the problem? If this has anything to do with realism in porn we're going to have an even bigger problem.

Can someone recommend me some good non vanilla stories from female, futa or mtf pov?

Many stories are not very well tagged in the lists so its hard to find stuff i like.

>>7016210
If it's not vanilla, it's going to have a tag for a kink. No one bothers with a "non-vanilla" tag, since tags are for describing what a story is, not what it is not.

>>7016210
I can't think of any that we've written. Futa is relatively uncommon and I can't think of any that I would say are truly from the female PoV.

Outside of this site, The Ballad of Jamie and Vera (Literotica) was pretty good. It starts kinda vanilla and goes QUICKLY off the wagon. It's also got a lot of content.

>>7016210
I have a mtf/futa story I've been kicking around for a bit, if I get to it I'll likely post it.

Depending on how it pans out though it might not be /tg/ related which seems relatively frowned upon here.

For the most part if you're looking for that sort of stuff though I'd recommend sites like Fictionmania or TGStoryTime. The quality varies pretty widely from story to story there of course but that's pretty much your best bet.

>>7016281
Don't be discouraged from posting non-/tg/ related stuff, I don't. This is /d/ not /tg/, although this general began over there we shouldn't let it dictate the content we post here.

>>7016285
I want to go back.

>>7016236
Considering how much futa is on this board, I'm surprised it crops up so infrequently here. I'm surprised I haven't written something futa myself, but I haven't found a suggestion in that vein I've liked.

>>7016345
It was never popular back when we were on /tg/ and that's been carried over when we got forced here.

>>7016360
If anything, it's become even less popular, or at least more likely to get an outright negative respsonse instead of just being coldly ignored.

Personally, I feel like we could do with much
more of our traditional, vanilla stuff like we had in the old days- but that's just my opinion.

Does anyone here like traps, cuteness, medical, rimming, cbt, and porn settings? I have a few requests which involve them.

>>7016384
Don't lead, just ask. If someone's interested, they'll pick it up. If not, you only waste one post. No harm done.

>>7016384
>cbt
When it comes to cute traps wearing nurse outfits in a hospital setting I prefer it if things don't go past denial play.

>>7015643

Yep, same viper and same MC!

I wouldn't constrain things to either option. I'd say write a few characters out, and let them behave naturally as you go along, and see how things unfold from there.The best authors I personally know never plan things out like that, they just take general ideas and concepts and let things flow naturally without trying to force something.

>>7016445
Ah, I already started with new characters, I write pretty fast:
>>7016193

Tell me what you think though, if you don't like the setup or you're set on seeing the same couple return I can always start over, I've only done the opening so far.

>>7016193

This is looking great so far, keep it coming!

As for the sex scenes intensity, maybe try something unique, like starting off with rape and then for one reason or another, it deescalates to more intimate and consensual.

Namefagging it up because I keep having to split my posts up as I catchup with the thread after work.

>>7016456

Ah, For some reason I thought the new characters were a temporary diversion/alternate storyline going alongside the main one, derp. I personally would enjoy seeing the same characters there, as I've grown pretty attached to them by now

>>7016458
>>7016461
Sure, I can sort that out.

Yeah namefagging is helpful, that way I can see where the feedback/requests are coming from, you can also PM me on Patreon if you need to.

>>7016406
Okay. My idea is for either a series of short writings or a longer smutfic about a candid femboy porn studio. It would be 70% qt traps being fucked and doing various /d/ things and 30% teasing, setup, and context that makes it meaningful. I have four characters in mind, any of whom can show up or not show up depending on what the writer thinks.

>20-23 year old bisex QT who started as a cosplay model, but has branched out into porn after being majorly turned on by crossdressing. Does a lot of lewd photoshoots and stuntcock work because of how easy it is for him to get hard and cum buckets while he's aroused.

>18-19 yr old really feminine looking guy with a nice ass and cute dick. Sees his job as getting paid to fuck people rather than pretending to have good sex while the camera is rolling. Actually flirts with and has chemistry with the people he fucks, and is really sensitive sexually. Can cum from anal sex and leaks a lot of precum.

>19 yr old who is still embarrassed by how much he likes gay sex. Blushes during even the vanilla scenes and begs for people not to clench on his dick too hard so he doesn't cum immediately. Doesn't have much of a refractory period and can go multiple times without stopping, especially if it's with a guy.

>18 year old guy sort of recovering from mindbreak. That's not realistic, but none of this is really how an actual porn studio would work. Really likes to be tortured sexually and does a lot of hardcore scenes for fetishists. He's completely gay but likes being forced to cum by a tight pussy. Actually not screwed up, except for how much he likes to be fucked hardcore.
.

>>7016469
They'd be in situations like this. >>7016419

Or other combinations of cute and lewd. Like the embarrassed guy is doing a clean photoshoot with the cosplayer, and he keeps getting hard and leaving the set to cum. The formerly mindbroken one is booked for a gangbang with a bunch of thicc dominant women and given an injection to make him cum almost instantly. He almost passes out from how good it feels and they keep riding his dick

Anything like that would be awesome. It's really hard to find actual femboy behind the scenes stuff, but when I do it's extremely hot.

>Straight guy fucking a trap, has a really awkward time getting it in and lasts for less than two minutes.
>Three twinks have a fairly serious cumshot contest and edge themselves for a half an hour to shoot farther.
>Twink getting rimmed isn't supposed to cum yet, but keeps telling the director off camera that he's about to and can barely hold back.
>Cute naked trap casually talking about how he should top the other actor, because he knows he'll cum really dramatically when he finally pops.

That but more /d/ and with less of the negatives that come with actual porn.

>>7016463

Something I'd like to see explained is how the hell the viper became so fucking huge. From what I understand, all of the advent are basically made off of a template, and so for her to be THAT different had to be some sort of conscious decision, both to be that big and keep it that way.

>>7016526
I did want her to be on the larger end of the spectrum as far as vipers go, but they look pretty huge to me in-game to begin with, did I overestimate their size?

>>7016537

No no, not at all. It's just that vipers are so much bigger than humans to begin with, and consequentially it takes way more for them to bulk up and keep it that way, even a little bit. I'm not saying I dont like it, I just find it super interesting and want to know more.

>>7016485
We usually prefer storylines that aren't similar to RL porno.

>>7016555
Dang. Thanks for letting me know though.

Generally when I see a cute trap, the first thing I think of is how he should be cumming like crazy or getting fucked. So almost anything written about that will be good.

>>7016193
wait are we not continuing with the main anon and his viper?

>>7016547
Sorry, I'm not really sure what you're asking. Do you mean her musculature? I guess that would require a hell of a lot of calories to maintain.

>>7016603
I wasn't going to do that originally, but you guys seem set on it so I'll change it around.

I got a solution, how about this:
Two-for-one, start off with a hard rape scene with Moreau and an unrelated Viper in the forest ending with his capture, then we switch perspective to the MC from the first two stories, who is then taken into custody because Moreau is his cousin and they think he might be a collaborator.
Then we can explore the whole Gestapo thing ADVENT has going on, do some world building, then MC's Viper sneaks into his cell because she's jonesing for the human D, and we can do the more intimate, risky public sex that was mentioned earlier in the thread.

Sound good to everyone?
I gotta go to bed but leave me any feedback you have and I'll read it in the morning.

Requesting a situation like this.

>Guy lives next door to a Monstergirl.
>They have a lot of sexual tension and eventually fuck.
>He's not ready for how good her pussy feels.
>Cums the second it's in her, her pussy is overflowing in seconds.
>After a few seconds he's cum harder than he ever has in his life.
>She doesn't pull off until she's done herself.
>His dick is still twitching and cumming once her pussy is gone.
>She explains her type of Monster uses their pussy as a weapon, overwhelming anyone who sticks it in. She wanted to be one with him, though. So she had to fuck him.
>Falls asleep cuddling him as he's still cumming.

>>7016610
I'd prefer they remain separate. I like where the previous one ended, and was happy to see it take place in the same universe from another perspective.

>>7016610
Two dudes in one story? Fuck no.
Stick with the new guy.

>>7016151
Seems that established monster like minotaurs and werewolf types are fine, in spite of clearly being ancient anthropomorphic animals.

>>7016610


A combination of size, musculature, and that slight layer of fat (which definitely wouldnt be on a template). a 6'7 bodybuilder dude needs alot more food and exercise than a 5'3 guys who sits around all day.

And that's just human anatony, which is realistically only 2 dimensions (height and width). Vipers have 3 dimension measurements, which means their giant bodies take the requirements for extra size and literally multiply them by 8 (height x width x length) at a minimum.

I'd normally write that off as background fluff, but when you remember that she is a soldier and thus is most likely working with rations/controlled food supplies and limited personal time, seeing how she pulled off that size starts getting interesting!

can i get some Xcom backstory?

why is he fighting the snek?
i thought humans and snakes were on the same side?

>>7016686
X-com is a video game where aliens are trying to invade Earth to take it over. In X-com 2 Earth lost that war and you're playing has what are essentially terrorist/rebels trying to take back the Earth from the aliens that conquered it. The guy in the first 2 stories is just a civilian while the new guy is one of the terrorists/rebels.

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>>7016610
keep the characters separate imo.

>>7016694
oh
i thought the snakes were occupying earth while fighting off other aliens

why didn't protag1 feel at least a little conflicted about getting fucked by the aliens that took over earth?

>>7016715
The aliens set up a blitz of propaganda after they won about how they were really the good guys merely trying to uplift the human race.

All bullshit, but only xcom knew the truth of the matter.

>>7016715
They completely control Earth. They got rid of all crime and cured a lot of people with their advanced tech. Of course they're also doing a soylent green style of shady/bad shit to humans too. People don't care how evil the people in charge are as long as they're not the ones being targeted/bothered.

So, it might be a good idea to let your story air out once you have done most of the ground work.

After giving it a few days I went to reread a few of my stories and suddenly a lot more issues just became so much more apparent.

Like holy shit, Galaxy of Terror had so many problems with repetition. I squashed a lot of it, but I think for now I am going to move on to other stories.

Here it is if anyone is interested in giving it a read.

http://pastebin.com/xy4n6cNM

Giant worm, noncon, impregnation, birthing.

Gonna start working around a story were a human man winds up in a world where he is rescued by a large monster girl.Though the kind of monster I have in mind might fall under the lines of furry I guess, I dunno its not gonna have human tits might be some cross of a wolf or otter. I am only getting the rough details hammered out right now.

>>7016720

Go on. What other details about that new story?

>>7016610
Keep them separate for now...

>>7016610


How about keep their story lines separate, but still include both for part 3? You could switch perspectives around to keep things fresh for both of them

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does anyone here have any female centaur/human male stories to share?

i'm trying to find as much of them as i can

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A succubus outbreak in the style of a zombie outbreak.

Succubized women become nudist nymphomaniacs with horns, wings and tails. They feed on sexual fluids from men and/or from other succubi; their preference is based on their sexual orientation at the time of succubization.

Infection is by contact with succubus fluids. Women are succubized, men and children brainwashed into mindless servants. Friendly succubi like to grab and kiss people; sneaky ones may leave drool or cum where people live; mean ones will tie/chain people up and use whatever sadistic ways come to mind.

>>7016873
Give me a day and I will cook something up for you friend.

>>7016899
thanks senpai

>>7016899
it would be great if it is bicorns, unicorns, nightmares and white horns aswell

>>7016610
Are they two separate vipers too?

>>7016623
>>7016635
>>7016712
>>7016798
>>7016853
>>7016975
That's a resounding 'no' on that then.
Ok new roadmap, gonna make an executive decision on this or it'll never get finished:

-short unrelated Snek story
-Snek 3 with original couple
-Fineprint (third Pinwheel story)

>>7016656
There's actually an interesting story behind the fat, I don't know if you've ever held a real constrictor like a boa or an anaconda at a zoo or anything, but they're actually really chubby animals. They're almost like babies, very fat, very soft. But, when they start coiling around your arm while you're holding them, you realize they have these steel cable muscles running down their bodies, you can't get the fuckers off you if they're set on staying.
So I think any chimera that was based on such snakes, like an XCOM Viper, would have that soft fat layer at least on the tail.

Soldiers have to stay in peak physical condition so I assume ADVENT would have either physically demanding work to keep them in shape, or a means to give them extra muscle mass like the Belgian Blue cow breed.

As for calories I doubt they're giving them steaks, but hyper dense high calorie rations are a possibility, this all applies to Mutons and Berserkers too which are canonically ripped and would have the same, if not larger calorie requirements.

Can any native English speakers help me out a bit.

The grammar check on my Word says that the word ''were'' in this sentence is incorrect grammar.

''He was alone, but below were those azure scales. ''

Says it should be changed to ''being''. I have no idea, it seems like the way I wrote it should be right...

>>7017088
Can you give me more of the sentence?

>>7017091
That was the whole sentence, but here have the whole paragraph.


Once he felt he’d regained himself he made a second attempt at getting up, but the result was the same. flying of the floor and fell back as his back refused to straighten. Now, he lifted only his head, even it seemed to get higher than it should, but he felt stable so he laid there supported by his elbows. Lucky spotted something blue below him. He turned to see better. Scaled legs with claws as long as the toes they connected were right below him. Spooked he leapt away from them, yet there was nothing behind him. Spinning on all fours his green eyes search the hall franticly. Nothing. He was alone, but below were those azure scales. He turned to see behind him for the creature that they belonged to.

>>7017097
The second sentence should star with a ''He came'', not sure why it didn't copy that.

>>7017097
Once he felt he’d regained his composure, he made a second attempt at getting up, but the result was the same, flying of the floor and fell back as his back refused to straighten. Now, he lifted only his head, even it seemed to get higher than it should, but he felt stable so he lay there supported by his elbows. Lucky he spotted something blue below him. He turned to see it better. Scaled legs with claws as long as the toes they connected to were right below him. Spooked, he leapt away from them, yet there was nothing behind him. Spinning on all fours his green eyes searched the hall frantically. Nothing. He was alone, but below were those azure scales. He turned to see behind him, looking for the creature that they belonged to.

I don't really understand the "flying of the floor and fell back as his back refused to straighten" part. Not sure what you're trying to convey there.

The ''He was alone, but below were those azure scales.'' part is grammatically correct, you're right.

Keep working at it that's not bad at all for a non-native speaker.

>>7017103
He's supposed to have just turned into a dragon, so I'm trying get across how the body can't be controlled the same way a human body would. Different body structures and all that... The dragons in the world would stand up in the same kind of shaky way that four legged animals do. It's also supposed to be about how he's a lot bigger, so it seems like he's getting way too high up by just standing.

Thanks for the help.

>>7016281
>>7016345
I wouldn't be opposed to reading some if some stories were posted.

There was a pair of F paladin / futa redeemed succubus a thread or two ago.

Anons? I've got a bunch of fic concepts swimming around my head, all revolving around various /d/eviant situations in a D&D inspired world and generally based on the idea of "human guy with monstergirl/monsterherm". Only problem is, I just can't figure out which one(s) to write or even if any of them should be written. Can I get some opinions?

#1: Scenes from the lives of Ezekiel and Draahzin; a trappy wizard and his pregnant kobold boifriend. Human/kobold, M/M (trap/shemale), mpreg, size difference, waff, egglaying, breeding, anal, oral, boobjob.

#2: A father-to-be dotes on his girlfriend, a hugely pregnant sphinx. Human/sphinx, M/F, hyperpreg, minor stuffing, flirting, belly worship, huge breasts, lactation, nursing, vaginal.

#3: A goblin "captures" (rescues) a trappy failed adventurer and tries to make him into her broodmare. Things... don't quite work out as she planned. Human/Goblin, Male (Trap)/Herm, rescue romance, shy dom, failed futadom, power-bottoming trapdom, mpreg, hermpreg, teasing, handholding.

#4: The clone-son of a witch-queen is politically arranged to marry two horde-queens to cement alliances. Can love bloom under such a condition? Human/Orc/Gnoll, Male (Trap)/Herm/Dickgirl, oral, anal, vaginal, breastplay, cuddling, threesomes, size difference, musclegirl, maybe penile insertion.

#5: Only survivors after their dungeon lair is invaded and their tribes are wiped out, a human necromancer and his "diplomatic envoys" become adventurers, and ultimately lovers. Human/Goblin/Kobold/Ratfolk, M/F/F/F, M/F, F/F, size difference, tailjob, spanking, assworship, boobjob, waff, cuddling, handholding, polyamory.

#6: The first time they got drunk and woke up in bed together was surely an accident. The second time, well, they brushed that off too. The third time? That was too suspicious to let go. Human/Minotaur, Male/Female, drunken sex, size difference, huge breasts, nursing, oral, 69.

>>7017287
Had to break it up due to space.

#7: When her human gish companion is hurt on a mission, a githzerai zerth is finally compelled to confess her feelings to the formerly oblivious soul. Human/Githzerai, M/F, hurt-comfort, tsundere coming clean, handholding, kissing.

#8: Surviving together in the post-apocalyptic arcane wastes of their world, it is small wonder that their relationship progressed beyond "professionalism". Human (M) with Aranea (F), Kobold (Sm), Naga (F), and Warforged (F).

#9: When an independent duergar smith buys a drow pleasure-slave to help her get through her heats, neither of them expected to fall in love. Duergar/Drow, F/M, malesub, power bottom, musclegirl, bald girl, size difference, body worship, developing feelings.

>>7017287
I like 4 (as long as the Gnoll has a pseudo-penis and not an actual one) and 6, maybe 3. They all seem a bit 'meh' to me, as they all look like porn situations instead of character stories with sex, but that's just a personal preference.

New story, this one's going to have multiple parts. Any writing advice is appreciated.

Guy is turned into a dragon and has to figure out how to live as his new self.

http://pastebin.com/Qs5TAcMg

Not sure about the tags on this one, should I tag for stuff that will be in the story or just for things that are in this part. For now I'll just drop what's specifically in this one.

>tags: human male, transformation to dragon

>>7017300
Given the amount of space 4chan provides, I can't exactly go into a huge amount of detail for what I've got planned with these. So, I stuck to what I hoped was the bare essentials.

As for 4, it's more of a "cunt-cock" - like a pseudo-penis, it's an extension of her female genitalia, but it also doubles as functioning male genitalia as well.

>>7016024
>Link? All I can find with searching is flash games.
Not sure if troll or genuinely unaware:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Warhammer_Fantasy_Battle

I humbly request cock growth smut.

>>7017287
>#2: A father-to-be dotes on his girlfriend, a hugely pregnant sphinx. Human/sphinx, M/F, hyperpreg, minor stuffing, flirting, belly worship, huge breasts, lactation, nursing, vaginal.
>#7: When her human gish companion is hurt on a mission, a githzerai zerth is finally compelled to confess her feelings to the formerly oblivious soul. Human/Githzerai, M/F, hurt-comfort, tsundere coming clean, handholding, kissing.
I like these.

The second one especially could be fascinating. How would you write a Githzerai?

>>7017418
Isn't that sort of a given if one of the characters has a dick?

>>7017441
Could be some type of denial or erectile dysfunction thing....

>>7017441

Erections hardly get any real focus either, but you know damn well what I meant.

>>7013397
What happened to the "<hr/>" ("horizontal rule") HTML tag? Even FanFiction.net lets you use those--but the writers there often still stick with their "~oOo~" section breaks.

>>7015908
>and living there long term would fucking destroy your joints, but I figure they'd rotate out human personnel, both because of the gravity and the stress of working with that many Borealans.

To be honest, given the stuff currently in late stage development and even some human trials right now treatments and enhancements to resolve that kind of thing would be less than trivial by that point.

>Implying we would tell the Borealans this rather than use it as a convenient excuse not to have to put up with their bullshit for more than four to six months at a time

>>7011835
Why is she holding a pair of disembodied breast in front of herself?

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>>7017713

>>7016000
Not the guy who requested but this sounds hype. Any idea when we can see it?

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Alright 3000 word update:

Last Stand
http://pastebin.com/SHF1Xmda
>bondage, oral, female ejaculation, tail job, kissing, size difference, large breasts, sweat, muscle, monstergirl

Cranking this one out fast and dirty so I can get to Snek 3, but hopefully you guys will enjoy it all the same. Basically no plot here besides the setup, it's just fap material.

Tell me what you guys think.

>>7016717
Sounds like a net positive still, though.

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>>7017986
We got a collaborator here boys!

>>7017992
No. It's worse. It's a Utilitarian.

>>7017793
Not sure. I've got a busy weekend ahead so I won't be able to get much done.

>>7018056
Do you have a blog or something I can watch?

>>7018062
Not really, no. I just post stuff in threads like these when they're finished.

>>7017986
Apparently you missed the part where their ultimate goal is to reduce all humans into a slurry of genetic material so their bosses can get new bodies for themselves.

>>7018112
And they couldn't get a slurry of genetic material with basic biochemistry? It sounds incredibly dumb. A starfaring alien species capable of neogenetics should be able to use chemistry and the technology that they have already displayed that they must have to get much more genetic material than billions of humans can provide.

>>7018124
It might just be the easiest and fastest way to achieve their goal. They don't care what happens to our species or planet just what they can take from us. All the species under the elders control are also subjugated species too.

>>7018131
It's definitely neither of those things. You just need living biomass for that, so the easiest thing would be deforestation. Well, fastest as stuff on earth goes. Ghemcal reactions are still much easier to scale up.

>>7018138
Except they're after human genetic material, not biomass in general. Apparently our genetic material is hot shit and what they need to achieve their goal of making their perfect bodies.

>>7017807
This is some good stuff. You've never done any muscle worship.

[spoiler]I hope there's a happy ending.[/spoiler]

>>7018161
Every single story he's written so far has the guy kissing/licking/admiring the muscle of the female in it.

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>>7018167
I-It's just a coincidence.
Don't read into it.

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>>7018186
>implying I'm complaining about it

>>7018186
>>7018190
Love this XD

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How do you guys feel about artwork added in between chapters?
Keep in mind it's like pic related, kinda crappy.

>>7017097
>Once he felt he had regained himself he made a second attempt at getting up, but the result was the same. flying off the floor and falling down as his back refused to straighten. Now, he lifted only his head, even it seemed to get higher than it should, but he felt stable so he lay there supported by his elbows. Lucky spotted something blue below him. He turned to see better. Scaled legs with claws as long as the toes they connected too were right below him. Spooked he leapt away from them, yet there was nothing behind him. Spinning on all fours his green eyes search the hall frantically. Nothing. He was alone, but below were those azure scales. He turned to see behind him for the creature that they belonged to.

Fixed the whole paragraph for you.

>>7017103
>>7017114
>>7017088
Grammatically it's correct but your sentence structure is weird, it should be
>''He was alone, but below him were those azure scales.

You need to show what the azure scales are below in a relative sense.

>>7018124
They were after specific humans, ones with latent psionic abilities, which were processed into the Avatars. The implication seemed to be that their original plan was to harvest the psionic portion of our species while co-opting the others as another mind-controlled client race, but due to XCOM's success at killing one of the Ethereals, they panicked and decided to mass-process everyone in the hopes of finishing their project before it could happen again.

>>7016739

The guy wants to escape from the crushing reality of modern life and has this desire granted in an unexpected way. I might just do something cheeky like heavy metals Locnar or something else.

He is thrown into another world that is going to welcome him with tundra weather. He is hardly prepared for this shift in season and is rescued from freezing to death by the monsterous female.

I am debating giving them a language barrier for realistic reasons... but at the same time, holy shit that will crank up the difficulty of character interaction.

Either way when she gets him back to her encampment. I want to slowly build towards anything sexually intimate and make their first interactions more out of curiosity as they both find eachother so alien.

>>7017325
I'm fairly certain he thought you meant a story called "battle fantasy", as in, a story that fit his request and took place in the fictional world of warhammer.

I know i did.

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>>7017418
Alright.

The Player Witch Augment
http://pastebin.com/bPDQRrM1

>Tags: cock growth, huge penis, small penis humiliation, masturbation, exhibitionism, witchcraft, futa, autofellatio, walla walla bing-bang

(the picture's the closest thing I had to a witch futa on my HDD, apparently)

>>7018420
>You need to show what the azure scales are below in a relative sense.

What? I legitimately don't know what you're referring to in this sentence...

As for the oddness of the structure, that's what I've been taught to do, it makes the text more, how to put this, interesting, captivating, not-make-you-want-to-wash-your-eyes-with-bleach-to-stay-wake, to use kind of ''adventurous'' language. It's supposed to spice things up.

Don't know if that was clear at all.

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>>7016899

>>7018675
The sentence seemed strange because you didn't declare what the scales were below.
Like a point of reference for them to look downwards from.

>>7018638
Poor little witch, planning on a second part?

>>7018186
More please.

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>>7018161
>>7019075
I'm almost done, I'm on the last scene, a couple of thousand words off. I'll have it out by tonight.
Snakefuckers lend me your energy!

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>>7019093
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!

>>7018964
It's not clear from the rest of the paragraph? Earlier it says that they're below him.

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>>7019046
I'd have to think of an angle for it. Since I'm not really into futa-on-male or vice-versa... I'm not sure where to go with it.

I would love to hear more about what you all thought about it, positive or negative. I wrote almost the whole thing in one long, inspired blast last night. It was very satisfying, and I can only hope it's as fun to read.

>>7019093
aaaaaaaaa sending pervert chi to you, loyal snekfriend

The final chapter of Lock, Croc and Two Smoking Barrels is here:

Chapter 26: For Those About To Croc (We Salute You)
http://pastebin.com/n7wZkdNU

>Tags: croc-girl, sex, nudity, public nudity, exhibitionism, mild humiliation, cunnilingus, breath play, consensual, lovey-dovey, silly, violence, menace, animal death, Florida.

An epilogue will follow this last chapter. Thank you all for following me on this very silly journey.

>>7019169
If you're not happy with your current hand of characters just send them to a bar to wonder what to do next and draw a few cards.

>>7018638
What are the sexes? You forgot the most important part.

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>>7019108
>>7019169
Done!
Never mind the amount of content you produced, the number of crocodile puns alone is worthy of the history books.

Last Stand:
http://pastebin.com/SHF1Xmda
>bondage, femdom, oral, female ejaculation, tail job, kissing, size difference, large breasts, sweat, muscle, monstergirl, orgasm denial, teasing, vaginal

>>7018638
>>7019241
What are the sexes of the characters that experience which tags?

>>Tags: cock growth (male and futa), huge penis (male and futa), small penis humiliation (male), masturbation (male and futa), exhibitionism (mild male), witchcraft (woman/futa), autofellatio (futa), walla walla bing-bang

The tags thing is the greatest stumbling block I have to writing erotica. I feel like it spoils some of what's going to happen.

I understand that an erotic story you're enjoying could suddenly turn into something horrifying without warning. But I don't know if I have the finesse to express what happens through tags without just saying what goes down (and who! zing!)

>>7019258
Nicely done, Snekguy.

>>7019277
No. I meant M/F, M/F/F, M/M, F/F, Male on Futa, Futa on Male, Futa on Female, etc.

>>7019280
Oh.

Well, spoilers. There's no actual coitus in this one. Just some masturbation and autofellatio.

Last Stand Ebook is ready:

https://www.patreon.com/file?h=6728846&i=565652

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>>7019258
> lusty reptiles taking over/working with a village/city/planet/etc to get easy access to warm blooded humans
you might get a kick out of the fact that when female snakes are overfed they become more fertile

>>7019146
It isn't clear anon, at best you could reverse the scale descriptions.

>>7019477
That's a good idea, I've developed a backlog though, I gotta burn through it before I do anything new.

Next is Uninvited: You Shouldn't Be Here (Snek 3)
Then Fineprint which is a continuation of the Pinwheel stuff.
Got nothing to do next week and a whole crate of Monster so I might try to crank those out.