Thoughts? Criticism?

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>>17851575

>>17851575
>>17851579
Meh, it's not the worst one I've read, but there's really nothing special or interesting about it.

It might as well say, "It's the Able SPC, except a witch"

Also, I wouldn't use the term "god like" to describe something in an official document.

There are quite a few uncomfortable word strings in there. Try to be more concise. You also flick between 'her' and 'it' which is quite jarring.

>>17851676
if you had any specific things i should change or add what would they be?

>>17851695
is there a good mix i should use structurally? or just stick to non gender titles?