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Phrasing insult for book 2017-06-20 10:48:55 Post No. 334712
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(Pic unrelated) I want character A to tell character B something along the lines of "and if you hadn't made that mistake, proving you're a disappointment and a slut, how would have things turned out for you?" But i need it to be smoother and believably hurtful. I'd like the italicized words to be there because i want to follow up on those qualities later in the book.)
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>>334712
Kek, forgot to italicize words. Words being "disappointment," and "slut"
Unless someone can think of something better, but i don't want it to be too crude.
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>>334712
i have no idea, but have you checked tvtropes? Perhaps your phrase falls under one of their trope categories
tvtropes. org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/Dialogue
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>>334720
No, I don't think it'd be there. I'm asking for help so the insult seems realistic, so the reader can be like "...ouch"
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Thoughts?
"So you're a disappointment & slut, and maybe, if you hadn't have f**ked up, then nobody would have realised, and you could have continued hiding those parts of yourself. But you did, because you are a f**k up."
Wasn't sure where we stood on swearing but thats my take on it!
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>>334766
Thank you, I can definitely use this
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