/vpwt/: Pokémon Fanfiction General and Writethread

And now for a Fic Recap

>New Fics

Anon's debut fic, involving Lucas
https://pastebin.com/putizivj

Anon writes about a trainer and his Mienshao at the beach. To quote the author, "this may have gotten a little borderline smut"
https://pastebin.com/RauQ53Bf
That same anon also wrote about a trainer and his Leavanny
https://pastebin.com/WiSxdyZh

Half Blood Jester wrote 3 things
Lass x Steven Stone (author is "pretty positive" it's SFW)
https://pastebin.com/KDyRpgUZ
May x Shelly + Grunts (NSFW)
https://pastebin.com/ePTJ72WM
Lyra (NSFW)
https://pastebin.com/dZ4fDHFK


>Updates

Chapter 4 of "Heaven's Slice", by Solar
https://archiveofourown.org/works/11428515
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12562146/4/Heaven-s-Slice

Chapter 22 of "The Dark Type", by ManifestDestiny
http://archiveofourown.org/works/9113758/chapters/26738979

Chapter 10 of "Vines of Deceit", also by ManifestDestiny
http://archiveofourown.org/works/9294437/chapters/26864664

Chapter 17 of "The Marriage of Mew", by Mimiga
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fEzMMweVa-YeaBhRlYBBjj6aRv75ST0JCLUrstK04eU/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 11 of "Au Coup Par Coup", by traipsingexodus
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12009986/11/Au-Coup-Par-Coup
http://archiveofourown.org/works/7262536/chapters/26862978

Chapter 2 of "Facade", also by traipsingexodus
http://archiveofourown.org/works/11290725/chapters/26882355


If there are any mistakes, please reply to this post with the correction.

>TotT

I absolutely do not off-handedly recommend music for scenes and fics. That would be a pleb move. If for whatever reason they ask, however, I DO have entire OSTs for some of my larger fics.

I primarily write to music in general, though at times I just forgo themes and listen to whatever's easiest to hear. Stadium Arcadium has basically never let me down.

>Do you recommend music to readers while reading certain scenes?

No. If most works of fiction don't need mood music, then fanfiction shouldn't either unless its Ace Attorney- the cases just don't feel right without the music.

>Do you listen to music yourself when writing certain scenes?

Trance most of the time. Energetic music helps me think.

>>33391444
>Do you recommend music to readers while reading certain scenes?
This is a thing? No, I've never even considered it.

>Do you listen to music yourself when writing certain scenes?
Nah, I tend to work best in silence. Usually when I'm writing I have nothing else going on to distract me.

>>33392239
>This is a thing?
Not in lemons, but it happens sometimes in Mary Sue pieces.

Has anyone else tried recording their stories by voice first?

>>33392652
Not first but I have read my work aloud and had TTS programs read it back to me for errors. I entertained doing an audio version of ACPC, but maybe that's for when it's done or something.

>>33392652
>>33392712
I also use TTS as a proof reading check. But robot voices turn into an irritating drone before they run out of words to read to me.

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Original Content Bump

Hey, it's Diviano here. You may remember me from a couple days ago on the previous thread, asking what people wanted to see in a story.

I'm proud to introduce the first little chapter of my story, The Neokoro Cases.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12629644/1/The-Neokoro-Cases#

Please give feedback either on here or on there. Thanks.

>>33394865

I'm pretty sleepy so I'll just limit myself to the first paragraphs, since a good intro is what keeps the reader sucked in. I might give more comprehesive critque later in the day but this'll suffice.

>Not many people have heard of Miko's home island, Neokoro. Neokoro is a small island off the coast of Poni Island of the Alola Region. Neokoro boasts a tiny population of just under one hundred citizens, and it's a hub for exotic Pokemon.

-Not too far off the coast of the well known Poni Island, lay the unremarkable Neokoro; a small island with around one hundred people living on it. Unknown outside Alola, the local population know is for being a hub of exotic Pokemon. Living on the island, Miko enjoyed his rather laid-back, rural life and the incredible range of Pokemon living in the wild to be seen.

[The first two sentences can be combined for easier reading and better flow, plus it's location should be the first thing said, not the fact it's the main character's home island. More description can be added to give the setting some character. Instead of being a basic island it's now: rural, laid-back, and somewhat unremarkable.]

>Three months ago however, little did anyone know that Neokoro was about to be invaded by Pokemon just a little more exotic than they were expecting.

-Little that anyone on Neokoro knew today, it was going to be visited by a Pokemon far more exotic than anyone could ever expect.

[You should stick to using a present day when it comes to time and instead move three months forward when it calls for it. This is because you don't mention, at any point, a shift in time to present day, which renders what was written moot- not to mention a later paragraph further confuses time but that'll be brought up when I get there. Another thing is that when you use adjectives, try not to use just- it dampens the effect. It's better used as a transition than supplementing adjectives.]

>>33395016

>Miko was fast asleep in his comfy blue bed, his azure cover rising and falling with his breath. Next to his bed was a fine wooden bed stand, with pens and a pair of glasses on top. A smooth and plastic Meowth alarm clock was plugged in, flashing the numbers "10:29" in light blue letters. Meowth's light grey paw waved itself side to side in the air, before the display ticked to "10:30".
Blaring from out of this Meowth clock was a digital recreation of Meowth's high pitched cry. Shaking himself awake quickly, Miko sat up in bed. He rubbed his eyes tiredly, before squinting at the clock and switching the alarm off. He stood up out of bed and quickly changed from his mint green pajamas to his daytime clothes - a blue t-shirt and black shorts.

-Underneath his azure comforter, rising and falling with every breath, Miko slept well though the light pouring through his window threatened his sleep. The Meowth-shaped clock on the well-crafted bed stand beside him ended whatever dreams he may have been having when ten-thirty came up on the blue display. The alarm went off, mimicking the Pokemon's very cry, waking up Miko. The boy slammed his hand down on the clock, shutting it off.
Groggily, the young boy sat up in bed and rubbed his eyes for a few seconds. A short stint of stretching and one yawn later, he jumped out of bed and slowly stumbled over to his dresser. He rummaged through the furniture, searching for something he fancied today before settling on a blue tee with a Pokeball logo and plain black shorts. He threw his pajamas into a hamper as he stepped out of his room and into the hall.

[Critique in next part because character limits.]

>>33395021

[Most of this is getting rid of uneeded information and adding descriptions to things that are important to give them some more character. The reader doesn't need to know what's on the bed stand, the fact the clock was plugged in or that it's hand moved, or what his pajamas are colored. On another note, adding actions to Miko gives depth to him- he's a child, he isn't going to instantly get up with all the energy in thw world. In fact, the very idea he's waking up at 10:30 means he stayed up late last night and would likely be quite sleepy.]

>>33395028

Probably should've done this in the first place but here's the last part I wrote out: https://pastebin.com/HczS4c9p

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Revo Lickbed Chatot Bump

>>33395644
What a strange name for a bump

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New chapter for Heaven's Slice.
Chapter 5: Tempting Fate

>AO3
https://archiveofourown.org/works/11428515

>FFN
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12562146/5/Heaven-s-Slice

These cats enjoy lasagna as much as I enjoy coming up with lore.

>>33395016
>>33395021
Hey, thanks for the feedback. In my opinion though, a lot of the feedback you gave isn't really feedback, it's just how you would write the story. I do really appreciate >>33395028 though, I will try to improve upon that in future chapters. Thanks!

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>>33393933
>mfw there is a need for Steam.

>>33398016
>a lot of the feedback you gave isn't really feedback, it's just how you would write the story.
"How [he] would write the story" is your feedback, quite literally, and you appear to be trying to distinguish that from "critique" (which you are choosing to honor) so you can isolate and disparage the former.

Critique points out mistakes.
Demonstration teaches how not to make them.

You don't need to adopt his style from his demonstration, but if you dismiss his effort out of hand, you deprive yourself of an opportunity to learn additional techniques. Which, after one glance at your opening paragraph, I believe are something you ought to hunger for.

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Trap bugsy fic incoming

Also, any thoughts on my previous works?

>>33398016
>how you would write the story
Yeah
Better than you
That's what you're supposed to take from it
If he can write better than the current you, then you need to write better than the current you.

>>33398016
>it's just how you would write the story.
Feedback has two parts.
>What not to do because it's wrong
>What to do because it's right
Good feedback will tell the writer what the writer did wrong and what they did right. The best feedback will SHOW it, as he was doing.

Hey guys, I wanna apologize for being a bitch of a dick earlier in dismissing cyanspark's valid feedback. I was in a pretty bad state of mind, but that's not an excuse.

>>33398610
>>33399124
>>33399296

So again, sorry for causing you guys to waste your time replying to me.

What I've done is taken some of cyan's feedback and reconstructed the first chapter to hopefully be better!

Let's give it another shot:

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12629644/1/The-Neokoro-Cases

Still accepting feedback.

>>33400553
Forgot to say, going back to the first draft of the chapter, I later went back and went over it and came to see that it really was some shit. I've completely changed the way the plot is set up in a way that's hopefully more pleasant to read. I hope you guys enjoy!

>>33400553
>>33400569
np dude, it's all a learning experience. glad you found value in the critique.

bump up the jam

>>33401337
bump bump bump it up

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>>33391444

>TotT: Do you recommend music to readers while reading certain scenes?
I personally do not engage in this practice. Doing so tends to be frowned upon in serious pieces of literature. Generally, it comes across as tacky; particularly if there is an interruption where the reader is told what song to listen to, even if the suggested music is appropriate.

A while ago, I conversed with a readfriend about ambient tracks for different settings in a story; however, such discussion was part of a PM and went beyond the scope of my presented work product as something superfluous.

>Do you listen to music yourself when writing certain scenes?
Absolutely. To each their own, but for me dead silence while writing is nothing short of anxiety-inducing. Editing is a different story, usually that's when I'll play some classical piano or work in a quieter setting by comparison. Going back to writing, something as simple as listening to rainfall with headphones on while describing a stormy environment is an amazing experience. Finding the “right song” for the job is a skill. Music with vocals can be a little jarring, but this may simply be my brain getting confused as I’m writing words while hearing words. I tend to frequently listen to video game music, film scores, and OSTs for that reason. It quickly gets me in the zone.

>>33401972
>I tend to frequently listen to video game music, film scores, and OSTs for that reason. It quickly gets me in the zone.
Second this; they're my go-tos. If the scene is supposed to have a specific feel, I'll try to build a short playlist of pieces from them to loop while writing.

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>>33391444
ToTT: Generally I just listen to my discord mates talking about stuff or watch one of them stream something because it requires only passive investment. Music tends to break my concentration unless it's jazz. On the rare chance I can't listen to people because it's distracting me I simply write in silence.

I don't suggest music for any of my work. Whatever you want to listen to while you read it is completely up to you. Ambient tracks are probably going to be best for most of my work, except for the smut, wherein you can insert whatever silly, saucy tunes you want. Why would you though?

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>>33402210
>Why would you though?

The dynamic return of Brock and misty bump

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>>33391444
>TotT:
>Do you recommend music

No, I find that a bit overbearing. Why should a writer tell people how to read their work? While it might enhance an experience for some, not everyone appreciates the same music. The most I've done, but haven't in a long time, was include certain song lyrics that I feel fit a certain a piece. Now I find that a bit cheesy.

I would say I am pretty influenced by music as a whole. My pen-name, series title, and a few chapter titles are small references to songs I enjoy. I have plenty of music I consider 'tied' to my work, simply because I find similarities in songs and am often reminded of certain scenes when I listen to them. I won't subject anyone to my bland, casual taste in music if I can help it.

>Do you listen to music yourself
Yes. I tend to just listen to my entire music library on shuffle, or if I'm trying to get the drive going for a certain specific scene, I'll find a song that reminds me of the feeling I'm going for.

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Are there any stories revolving around the introduction of the opposite sex in a usually gender-locked species (female braviary, male kangaskhan, etc)?

>>33404355
>did you know most lagoea are male.
>using a period instead of a question mark
ree

>>33391444
>TotT: Do you recommend music to readers while reading certain scenes?
Never.

>Do you listen to music yourself when writing certain scenes?
In rare cases. I had a particular album on when I wrote the Grace/G.V. conversation during a dream when Grace accessed a memory of a hotel suite. The descriptions of G.V.'s songs changing mood reflect that album, as does the comment about time seeming to have been moving slowly and quickly over the same period, which is a comment on how quickly the scene reads versus the time spent in writing it.

Anyone have something to let me drink the salty tears of Serenafags?

>>33407566
I don't know. I mean, you can use a cup if you'd like. Maybe one with a straw.

>>33407566
galleta

I want to read.
I want transformation. I want it to really make me think. I want it to be interesting in whatever way possible.
...I'm probably fine with whatever transformation fic you throw at me, since I have't read a remotely good one in quite a while. Searching on ffnet is hell, and ao3 has nearly none.

Post your favourite transformation fic.
Mine is "I Became a Vulpix"

Hey guys, Diviano back again! I've just finished the second chapter of my story, The Neokoro Cases. I've taken into consideration a lot of the feedback I've received, and I hope you guys like it!

Chapter 2: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12629644/2/The-Neokoro-Cases

((Chapter 1, in case you haven't read it: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12629644/1/The-Neokoro-Cases))

>>33409415
I'll give the first paragraph a glance.
>Indeed, that was the last normal day for Miko, Ray, and Lena. It didn't seem to be the case at first, but things gradually devolved into an odd state of affairs. Early, no later than five in the morning, Ray and Lena were sleeping peacefully in their house. Miko's mother, Delane, too slept in peace. Miko, however, was a different story. He was currently in the middle of a nightmare even more intense than the previous night's. This one wasn't about his Machop though, no, this one was about him.

You're opening with some sort of blurb/establishment/recap…thing that uses a process of elimination to tell us what you've decided will be interesting and then narrate your cameraman, a sort of third-third-person perspective, indicated by "was currently" before you focus on a POV character. Let's focus faster and show more than we tell.

>In each of their respective bedrooms, Miko, Ray, Lena, and Delane—Miko's mother—slept with their faces cast in the red glow of their alarm clocks, each showing a time within a minute or two of 4:38 a.m. All slept peacefully but Miko. His face contorted and spoke fragments of broken words as he endured a new nightmare, one even more intense than last night's. A factor contributing to that intensity was this dream's protagonist: It was about him, not his Machop.

• Establish the visual, exploiting what's in common between the three or four separate camera angles, and get away quickly from the shots that aren't the scene. The clock time doesn't matter much, so don't be afraid to be specific when it aids visualization for free.
• We've got visual, so stick with it and add some sound. Now we're at his bedside, not just being told that some weeaboo's sleeping fitful.
• Finally, justify that this one's worse. You're stating why this this dream is different. I'd describe why this dream is more intense since that's the attribute you chose to emphasize.

Don't know how overdone/trite this is, but I keep getting the urge to write speculative fiction about what a world with Pokémon might actually be like. I know it might get into edgy territory pretty quickly, but at the same time there's a certain horror element to living in a world where animals have powerful telepathic and elemental-kinetic abilities that I'd like to have come through.

Have other writers attempted this? Any recommendations?

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>>33410696
>The only way to write, imho
Build the world up from the element YOU find most disturbing about a realistic pokeverse. Chances are readers will be able to empathize better with this reality if you yourself have certain feelings that create tension in the atmosphere as you write.
Also, share your work. Acquire feedback. Improve. R&R
That's how I do it.

>>33410696
Every one of us who tries to write has to do this at some point or another, even if it's as simple as "how does a pokeball work?" The only limit is how far you want to go.

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>>33410696
>Never again
he could only think to himself until he last came up to the towering dedication statue. It was the model of a large Dragon, originally painted with purple lines that had quickly faded away since the wrong kind of paint was used upon this bronze.
Towering over the figure of a cliff, it looked down into the model of the sea’s uneven surface, upon the countenance of a Blastoise, this with a cracked shell and missing his right cannon, clad with the uniform of the Fifth Empire.
His eyes teared up. This was a memory of things that had happened so long ago… but they were so real, so relevant. They had all been responsible for this world, these problems, damnit! He thought, how could Pokémon be obstinate to the point of desiring each other’s death?
>"May they rest in peace at the bottom of the deep blue sea."
the plaque read.

>>33410696
Isn't that what we're all doing? (Lemon ranchers, excepted.)

"Edgy territory" is a false problem that comes from worrying about the wrong things.

Example:
>"Oh, god, I think I see a Psychic-type over there!" whispered the native in my ear, about to quickly turn away, grab whichever of our supplies were at hand, and flee, abandoning what remained.
>The creature looked like an innocent, harmless little thing, like a pale-skinned toddler wearing a green salad bowl on its head. "What harm could that do?" I asked. Too loudly, as it heard my voice and looked our way. I was still peeping from the bushes, but my guide was visible at that moment. She began to say something about how they, "…can teleport your—" That's all she said, because the creature demonstrated. Surrounded briefly by a colorful glow, both the monster and my only friend in this strange land, it somehow caused my guide's body to suddenly deflate and then collapse to the earth, her own heart, kidneys, intestines, and other things appearing above her head and raining down upon her. I stumbled away as I watched the heap of organs slide off of her body, revealing her face, her eyes still twitching. All I could do is what she had hoped to do: Run, hide, and never let a Psychic-type get a fix on you.

Teleportation and telekinesis provide fun new ways for a monster to kill a human, which is a fixture of man-v-other archetypes. It's easy and tempting to go full scale "weak humans will be extinct because of magic monsters" in SF contexts, and it works well in the two-hour cinematic format, but if you follow into the archetype fully, the archetype as a dressed-up generic is all you get.

The blue ringed octopus carries a venom that kills a human in two minutes. Man isn't extinct because that monster doesn't have a motivation to kill humans (it isn't interested and would rather flee) and it isn't ubiquitous. (People die to them because they accidentally step on one in shallow waters.)

(Continued.)

If you approach "world with Pokémon" with "look at the ways they can kill us" as your position, you'll envision a very dangerous world. But there are plenty of animals that can kill us, and some of them we keep as companions. And, we all know that the most dangerous animal is man, which I feel is the most important factor in writing for the pokemon context. Despite their ability to destroy and harm, Pokémon refrain from creating an arms race among themselves and among humans they are inclined toward building amicable relationships. These "edgy territory" things that one can imagine being within their scope must be considered and can be put to great dramatic use, but with the caveat that only in extreme times do they resort to extreme measures, and if one is worried about the "human in a pokemon suit" problem in portraying a pokemon, that's one measure of with how much human behavior a pokemon acts: Humans scheme to use their abilities to commit acts even when they don't need to commit those acts. This gives credence to the role of a trainer commanding a pokemon in battle: The pokemon would naturally flee, offer truce, or shoot to disable or kill with whatever weapon it had; the trainer chooses how to make it a contest. (I'm hoping that, with the above average number of battles I'm portraying in my next story, I'll be giving a better feeling of my conceptualization of the commanding trainer's role and the trained pokemon's capacity for learning its trainer's style, especially since the concept of a pokemon becoming mentally in-sync with its trainer is now a game mechanic.)

(Continued.)

Instead, worry about balance, how the presence of these powerful powers reaches equilibrium. I showed this in Waterlogged, where there is something of a cycle. There are Water-types at the store, Grass-types that can hunt them, and Fire-types that can hunt them; Lydia breaks through this cycle, strengthening herself enough to challenge the water types and to evolve. Then there are Water/Psychic-types at the inland pool that can suppress those Fires, reversing the loop. If you're writing something that seems overpowered, worry about how the natural order will figure it out for you, and if it won't, give it a hand. :)

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>>33411183

>>33416102
>>33411183
what's the meme here, what am I missing

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>writing
>captcha

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>>33416963
Anon, dedications to soldiers lost at sea are not memes.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1KCiMdR1ox0
I made a description because I had wrote about an aged Empoleon walking down a cobblestone path in the pouring rain, determining that he was going to see a memorial to those fallen in the Second Great War. The Water side was the losing side, actually.

I simply drew what I described. The cannon is on the wrong side, I forgot to draw the uniform, I missed the words "in peace" on the plaque, Palkia's chest is too short, and I was too lazy to color everything in bronze.
But if you couldn't tell, Palkia is supposed to look like an angel, he is holding out his hand to the dying soldier (who is also reaching back).
It didn't turn out how I had hoped... also constraining myself to pixel multiples of two limits what sort of art I create. The files take up less space, so it's worth doing.

>>33417253
>The files take up less space, so it's worth doing
What kind of computer are you on that you need to optimize mspaint files

>>33417350
>>using not period instead of a question mark
>ree

>>33417350
>optimize mspaint files
It's probably an OCD thing.
Which would mean I would likely ruin his night if I admitted that, out of curiosity, I re-saved that 20.2 KB png file as a four-color png and got it down to 8.6 KB.
So I won't mention that.

>>33417350
>optimize mspaint files
Also, sector sizes and limits to total inodes or similar on a file system making differences in small files trivial unless you're going to tar them together, I expect.

However, it's appreciated by dial-up internet users since they count time by the kilobyte.
>browsing on dial-up
>This web sight has been optimized for Netscape, Internet Explorer 4, and a screen resolution of 800x600 in high color mode. [clickable animated gifs of browser icons to download them]
God, I miss 90's home computing. You millennials missed out on some serious shit.

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>>33417350
They combine and divide really easily.

>>33417924
No, I used to have dial-up. Not anymore, since 2012.
>>33417825
Vectorize it. Will it be even smaller?

>>33418187
>Wright-upon-Morrino
bong?

>>33418300
>Vectorize it. Will it be even smaller?
Discover a fractal formula that, when iterated on a seed value that can be expressed in fewer than 70,080 bits, produces the image after mapping a 512×512 pixel space into Cartesian space.
Zoom out and pan the fractal graph to see the story's whole world in that precise moment.
Plug it into the .kkrieger engine and experience it in first person perspective.

>>33418413
Nope, just familiar with British names.
I'm from the Mid-west, actually.
Potumaris is kind of a generic suburban midwestern "utopia".
The perfect home for my female protagonist.

>>33418820
tfw I am so eager to use my knowledge of the urban northeast to make a young indignant protag more relatable but as of yet I have no use for a character from this area, and I'd rather not make an OC region but if I do it'll be chock-full of ghosts

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>>33419531
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>>33419531
Wouldn't it make sense for "Armerica" to be Unova? North Unova and South Unova roll off the tongue better and doesn't look like you added a letter to America.


Also, Russia was mentioned in Gen I. Shouldn't it be there instead of Algos?

>>33420897
>Wouldn't it make sense for "Armerica" to be Unova?
Wouldn't it make more sense for it to be Isshu?

From what I see in >>33419531, I don't think that matters will improve by giving him too much critique to think about right now. Anon has enough trouble dead ahead with just what he's coming up with on his own:

>Label China "Xantho."
>Xantho, from Greek, meaning "yellow."
>"Xanthous" is a now-forgotten adjective for the yellow-skinned ethnic group.
Thanks for giving me something to giggle over while I begin the second half of my morning.

>>33420897
Unova is just part of New York, not the whole country. Is Alola in Unova?
>>33421013
It also sounded like Kanto.

Iran-Aryan
Mexico-Yucca
Canada-Hellas(meaning Greece) and Hello
Britain-Brythonic
Russia-From Latin "algu" meaning coldness
Brazil-Hazel is a nut too
Spain-"gordo" means fat
Cuba- From "cigar"

>>33421394
>Unova is just part of New York, not the whole country.
This. It's how I handle regions like Orre based on parts of Arizona in my latest fiction while also referencing Unova as the major metropolitan city in the northeast US. Makes for a great way to contrast cultures I might add.
>inb4 non-maingame
Two whole games based on the southwest region, same importance given to a specific area of the country as B&W/2.

>>33421013

I admit, I came off a bit strong but I have a thing for map making- I love world building and all that jazz.

I have issue with Isshu. Mostly based on the naming scheme. The America's are named after an Italian explorer, Amerigo Vespucci. I think a better, fantasy name would be Vespucias, after his last name.

>>33421394

You're telling a New Yorker, NJ is part of NY. Those are fighting words.
Seriously though, Unova, compared to the other regions, is a naming pickle because of the geography, the lore, and the way they designed the layout of the towns and cities- especially the stretch between Nimbasa and Castelia which in IRL is where a lot of trendy neighborhoods and such are (Soho, Greenwich, Chelsea...).

With Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, and Sinnoh, you could easily say they're all prefectures of a faux Japan. Kalos is just France. Alola can either stand on its own or be a piece of a faux US.

Also Underland. I chuckled.

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>all this everything
Man, I just made all the regions into self-contained islands, more or less.

>>33423362
>I just made all the regions into self-contained islands, more or less.
And then you asked yourself, "Am I right? Am I wrong?" And then you told yourself: "My god… what have I done?"

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Anyone here read It's a hard life?
the plot is a bit nonsensical but i enjoy the character interactions and the art.
Also nidoqueen is best girl. I really like the artists take on her design.

>>33423210
>Seriously though, Unova, compared to the other regions, is a naming pickle because of the geography, the lore, and the way they designed the layout of the towns and cities- especially the stretch between Nimbasa and Castelia which in IRL is where a lot of trendy neighborhoods and such are (Soho, Greenwich, Chelsea...).

Fucking this. Unova's geography pisses me off so much. At least with a region like Sinnoh, for example, whatever IRL places not mentioned/overwritten in-universe can still be placed there for the sake of continuity in fics (that village famous for the bear attack, the rest of the mountains of ezofuji, the shiretoko peninsula, etc). But Unova completely fucks this trend up. Castelia is a gigantic circle instead of the weird oblong whatever of NYC. Pretty hard to implicate the setting of uptown when geographically there is no up.

>>33424141
Yeah, It's A Hard Life is frequently recommended here when the subject of webcomics/nuzlockes comes up.

ITT: Fanfic writers who make their own maps throw mud at Game Freak for making their own maps after deciding to stop directly referencing IRL places.

>I need an aspirin.

>>33425228
The actual issue is that the geographpical shape of the unova region is based more on Hong Kong instead of it being 100% from NYC

>>33425298
I'm glad they stopped referencing IRL places. Makes things easier to deal with.

Captcha: Brazil Leeds

Is that so hueland?

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>>33425298
>he doesn't know why they're mad

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>>33425298
I found this gem from 2010, it's not my creation

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>>33425298
It's because Game Freak bungled their FIRST American region (not only that, but the LARGEST population center on the East Coast) after faithfully imitating four Japanese regions. FOUR.

No, I don't have a problem with "fixing" Game Freak geography. They're not headquartered in New York, after all.
I have absolute contempt for New York in general, but even more for the people who have failed to capture its essence.

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>Create quick series of smutty, trashy insanity
>Have fun writing it
>People seem to enjoy it
>Get messages with suggestions where to go next after each part

This is a good feeling

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Here's Chapter 23 of [The Dark Type], "Reunions": http://archiveofourown.org/works/9113758/chapters/27033810

I hope you can put up with my minimal effort in making a Sneasel-language.

>>33425298
but I don't make my own maps because I'm not a faggot

>>33427286
That must be a great relief to you.

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>>33427286
TIL: Game Freak is a bunch of faggots

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>>33427489
>that image

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Yum cookies

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>>33427657
Yum pizza

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I can only see human-dolphin relationships as being morally defensible, and even these I strongly feel that they go against some kind of natural law, being done primarily by unsavory people.
Still, if you were to marry a dolphin, that would be a lesser crime than marrying the same sex.

>>33427965
u wot

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Hey /vpwt/! I've been deliberating on this idea for a short series for some time now; it goes something like this:

[s] > a lycanroc that has been the main character's buddy since he was a kid, but now that he's all grown up she spends her days lazing around in his apartment while he works
> she would daydream about the all the dirty romps she had years ago in the daycare or the forest while our protagonist was away at school
> this would be unknown to our main character, as to him she was always the stalwart guardian that would look out for him
>maybe culminating in some "forbidden love" in the end [/s]

Any thoughts?

>>33428904
Fuck, last time I ever post long paragraphs on my phone

>>33427502
looks like a regular question to me, what's the problem?

I find myself still at risk for making one of my pokemon characters too human. I'm using lack of dialogue as a crutch to showcase his thoughts, which aren't profoundly alien--they're just childish. But then when I need him not to be childish, I make him not childish. I'm still making conveniences for myself to sidestep proper characterization. This specific character is supposed to have the overall maturity of a 7-year-old (surprisingly mature as you quickly learn working with kids), the street sense of a dealer, and the emerging conscience of a recently-adopted child.

I've seen this topic discussed here before, so any advice on how to keep myself in check and not make this inhuman lizard thing act simply like a selfish preteen?

>>33427965
>Still, if you were to marry a dolphin, that would be a lesser crime than marrying the same sex.
You're implying a mutual exclusivity when none exists: Someone could marry a dolphin of the same sex. Does that compound or average-out the sin?

>>33428904
That sounds like a typical lemon on the basic pining-female/oblivious-male premise except,
>maybe culminating in some "forbidden love" in the end
Maybe why? You've established that she's the daycare's bicycle, that raising her tail for single-serving boyfriends is her jam, and that she's no longer getting a thrill from borrowing Master's electric toothbrush while he's out, so "guardianness" has nothing to do with Male Protagonist's cognizance of how many miles she's put on her pussy and—aside from making lots of omelets with so many eggs popping out of her stretched-sloppy snatch whenever she's not been locked up in the apartment—he obviously isn't troubled by it, so he shouldn't think much of her making her being horny known to him except that it's time to take his slut to the orgy shack to let a small herd of mudbray run a train on her till she settles down.

Because it sucks to need to brush your teeth and the battery light's flashing red again.

>>33429056
Consider providing a sample, or likely the usuals will drag this into the same argument we've had a hundred times about the balance between human and inhuman behaviors in the portrayal instead of a discussion about what you can do to make your character's portrayal seem fresh and interesting, which is what you're probably wanting.

aa

I'm fairly sure I want the protag of my story set in a completely new region to be farmer girl wit ha ground starter. Should it be a
Rhyhorn or Sandile though? I like Krookadile more.

Three stage ground type preferred

>>33430942
Why not both?

>>33431004
She's supposed to have a variety of types, so she has a Pokemon for a home, one for each of the Three Realms and one for the Two Domains. Ground type is for her home.

>>33431014
Both is better. Then she can have two homes.

>>33431058
It's not, they'll both be the same home since they're both ground

>>33431014
>she has a Pokemon for a home
>>33431101
>they'll both be the same home
I apologize for misunderstanding. I thought that you intended, "a Pokemon for AT home," but now I see that the Pokemon will BE her home. She lives inside of it.

So the decision comes down to climate and neighborhood. Both are suited for tropics, but 'Dile has the advantage on the outsides: Really dry or kinda swampy. Rhy gets the nod if it's more balanced, like jungle conditions. However, if she will be attacked while inside of her home, living inside a Rhydon may be preferable for the tougher hide, especially if she can evolve her home with a Protector. Does she know anybody she can house-swap with who can be trusted to swap back?

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>>33429065
Compound, obviously.
But why would you ever want to marry a male dolphin?
Male dolphins form rape gangs, torture porpoises for fun, and kill the children of widows.
They're wankers and homosexuals.
Female dolphins don't deserve these jerks.
There is too much risk in male dolphins being with female humans.
In reverse, I can say that there is a significantly better chance of non-injury.
But you can't really use any of the consent arguments against dolphins. They could actually drown any human rapist. Dolphins have also been observed to commit suicide.
Their emotional intelligence is sometimes stated to be greater than that of humans. So if you believe that there is nothing wrong with interracial couples, and nothing wrong with infertile couples, and even marrying the disabled, then there cannot be anything wrong with a man marrying a female dolphin.
Notwithstanding this, most of the people pushing this are also irresponsible freaks.
But there is a double standard here. We have documentation of homosexual couples being abusive, the behavior engendering STD's, and deleterious towards one health.
In comparison, female dolphins seem anodyne. I still think that it's wrong, but it's in fact less wrong.
It's all about having consistent moral principles for myself, really.
And that means accepting uncomfortable truths, not cherry picking where they apply and where they don't.
A male human marrying a female dolphin is more legitimate than a male human engaging in sodomy exclusively with one other male human.
Whew, that was cathartic.

>>33431741
Your dolphin fiancée is going to have to jump through a lot of hoops to get the marriage license OK'd. You may have to go fishing for a justice as open-minded as you are. Be sure to get lots of video and pictures, your ceremony and reception will make a real splash on Facebook and everybody will wish they could have such a whale of a time.

And don't forget, when booking a destination for your honeymoon, make sure their marital suites feature a water bed.

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>>33431939
Sir, your puns may have exceeded the legal limit.

>>33431741
Is this some kind of drawn out metaphor for pokephilia or do you just really want to fuck a dolphin anon? Is this satire maybe? What is even happening? Help.

>>33431741
>Male dolphins form rape gangs, torture porpoises for fun, and kill the children of widows.
Keep in mind porpoise and dolphin are not synonymous. It's a square-and-rectangle thing. Furthermore when you cite 'emotional intelligence' I believe it is actually speaking of non-porpoise species of dolphins; there are some dolphins that have similar neocortex neural counts as humans which MIGHT be a function of intelligence.

So we're not talking our bottlenosed friends, we're talking their blunt-beaked, fat-headed cousins from the Amazon or whatever. Keep that in mind.

Also seconding >>33432646
>captcha
>joining anas

>>33432653
>So we're not talking our bottlenosed friends
Watch your "We," he could be. You're choosing to exclude them because you're an alt-right neocortexist.

>>33432653
>>33432646
>do you just really want to
Murk loar and read the thread. He stated his working position in >>33427965. Clearly he's debating the sin of homosexuality versus other paraphilias.

>>33427502
he used 3x5 (three fives) instead of 5x3 (five threes)

>>33429065
>>33428904
i am leaving this thread

>>33427489
>>33432973
What triggers me is that they're calling it a "strategy." Repeated addition is a method, a procedure, an algorithm, even a heuristic. But it's not a strategy because a strategy implies that there is foe to defeat and if "5×3" is a sentient enemy, we've got bigger problems than deliberate stupidification of 'Murican larvæ.

>>33432984
You can leave /vpwt/, but /vpwt/ will never leave you. Every time you brush your teeth, you'll remember Lovelorn Lycanroc.

>>33432984
>You can check-out any time you like, But you can never leave!

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>>33432646
The fact that you are confused proves that I said exactly what needed to be said, and it just hasn't sunk in yet.
>>33432910
This guy gets it.

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>Continue with the paperwork, treat it like a yogurt family, and then we’ll be all hunky-dory, alright? Now Smoochum doesn’t exist. If you give the Talmud to a Monkey-capped Shaymin the clock won’t strike seven so long as the potatoes in the oven were cooked long past midnight, thanks be to God, because horses don’t eat meat on Fridays, while the moon keeps expanding its phase into the game horizon of Battletoads, where the sun never sets and the drinks are all free, and we can keep the change, despite what that stupid kid told you on the school bus. He was always a liar. Don’t drink the potion, either.
When I'm tired, I type literal nonsense.

>>33434507
i like it

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>>33434507
>flooding stop

>>33392239
>Nah, I tend to work best in silence
This is something more people should consider. Writing in silence gives the best results, it's ok to listen some music before or after writing, tho

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Hello there, writethread. Long time no see. Hope everyone's doing well. It's been quite some time since I was last here while using my name, that is, and even longer since I last updated my story. The primary cause, for those who care to know, has been some pretty bad anxiety getting the better of me and holding me back. But I've slowly been overcoming it, and I think I've finally reached the point where I can do what I've been wanting to do: finishing that Combee story I started last October and never finished (though it wouldn't surprise me if nobody remembers that I was even writing a story in the first place).

Anyway, enough with the blogposting. Sorry about that, by the way. Let's get down to business: I present the exceedingly-long-belated chapter 6 of "Outcast of Comb Island". I'm pretty sure this is where I left off, but it’s been so long I'm not 100% certain
https://pastebin.com/SJXUb8AZ

Any advice or feedback is appreciated. I highly doubt this chapter is flawless, especially because I'm quite rusty after doing very little writing for months on end. And as for the remainder of the story, I'll do my best to finish it soon. In fact, it's technically already written out, but not totally finalized, so it shouldn't take too long to complete now that I've got the ball rolling again. I'll probably upload both remaining chapters this upcoming weekend.

>>33435123
Anyone know what he's referring to? I'd like to see short stories based on the darker dex entries.

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I can't tell if I've gotten sick. (physically sick, mind you. My mucus is thicker than usual, but I think that it's this stupid medication that I'm taking that also increases my yellow bile production.)
Still, I value the truth.
The truth is that you all have intrinsic worth.
That remains true whether or not I finish my story.
I'll set a goal for myself: I must get the first chapter out by the end of September.
Perhaps it will be called "Free Creatures: A Story of Changes".
Tulla (Latias) has two friends, Galba (Absol) and Drausus (Staravia), who change in very different ways in response to their suburban environments. Meanwhile, this interesting uncanny world has many different cities with many different problems. How did this happen? What is its history? Basically, modern society but without humans and modified to fit Pokémon realistically.

>>33436071
latin anon, is this you

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>>33429065
>eggs
That never even crossed my mind. Maybe I should just stick with a simple slice of life, hm
Or maybe something with electric toothbrushes...

>>33436089
>That never even crossed my mind.
typical male not thinking of the consequences

Buml

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Managed to resolve issues in a chapter I received feedback on. Feeling good.

Since discussion has stalled a bit, which font is your favorite?
>For writing
>For reading

Boring 12pt Times New Roman here for typing (one of the endangered species around /vpwt/ still writing drafts in cursive), and I like reading in serif.
>Inb4 wingdings1/2/3/webdings

>>33438661
I've taken to changing the font any time I catch myself losing focus while proof-reading such that I think I've proof-read something but find later I let something slip through.

I also try to proof-read at least once in a fixed-width font, for similar reason: It changes the word sizes and shapes a little, preventing the brain from being lazy and starting to assume the details.

But I still let way too many errors walk past me.

>>33438661
"Sans serif" for both. I choose not to learn what it is, because I once spent far too long learning about typography, and then came to the sudden realization that none of it mattered. You can learn to like any font. "Design" is more about status-seeking than practical utility.

>>33438695
I tried that myself, but I didn't notice any difference in error rates.

>>33438756
It probably doesn't improve my catches either, but I notice that I'm trying instead of noticing that I'm nodding off because my stories are so damned boring.

>>33438695
I should try doing that sooner while proofing. I've noticed when I upload to FFN, the sans-serif in document manager results in my final review to detect many errors. Always assumed it was because of my nerves right before posting.

>>33438756
>You can learn to like any font.
That seems fair. So maybe the question is better phrased as which habit you've adopted.

>>33438781
Why are you writing boring stories all of a sudden? You have done better than that.

>>33438661
I write in Cantarell and read in Literally Anything

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>>33436076
Fortasse.

>>33438990
Checking my text editor, Cantarell (16) is what I'm on right now; switched to it somewhere around starting O/C Chapter 7 because I did so much re-rewriting that my head got stupid and merely looking at text in the previous font drained my mojo.

>>33438835
>You have done better than that.
Exactly:
>Why are you writing boring stories all of a sudden?
I used up all of my good material. Should've quit when I was on top with Waterlogged and LL. Or changed names to protect the not-shit ones.

>>33438994
>Fortasse.
Is that like a fortnight, but with fourteen asses instead of fourteen nights? You could probably haul some borax with such a team.

>>33439142
The only material of your I can think of as being potentially boring is the stuff that you keep too vague to enjoy because "that was my goal ;) "
You've said before that you aim to make the little hints you drop in your various stories simple enough to stand alone, but to take on more meaning when you give them more attention in later fics (the connection between Waterlogged and LL is good because both fics stand alone and there are no questions like "wait what is this about Hollingsmoth Island". You're not too detailed but not too vague either)
In other fics, however, the heavy subject belies a great many details that the reader instinctively knows are being withheld, and when the story is bland and confusing without them (One-way Mirror ad Diaphanous Perception are the biggest offenders).

tl;dr if you think your shit's getting boring, stop cucking us out of necessary details and drop a few. Your readers will only thank you.

>>33438661
For writing, I just use generic 12pt default fonts. Usually Calibri, otherwise Times New Roman.
For reading, I don't care so long as it isn't something hard to read.

>>33438695
That's an interesting idea. I've never done it before, but I might try it out. I'll take any help I can get when it comes to proofreading.

>>33438661
Writing platform default. Whatever you give me is what I take, short of outright offensive looking fonts.

Reading is the same way. Never feel compelled to change the font unless it's a really bad font.

>>33439239
>necessary details, drop a few.
I'm already sweating doing that. I'm keeping a count in my head of how many (and how blatant) hints there are that I'm dropping on the way to Act 3 to something that I want to see become a fore-head slapping "why didn't I catch that?" moment. Each time I add a hint I think, "that's it, you just gave it all up to all the readers you didn't already auto-spoil it for," and since a reveal is intended, that seems like a bad thing to do. But if I leave it at my preferred level of hinting they'll probably all go completely overlooked and make it seem like a bullshit ass-pull.

>your shit's getting boring,
I'm writing the kinds of scenes I don't like writing, e.g. gym battles. And I found out too late that everyone's decided they're sick of repeated species after I commit to serving mutton with a hot wing on the side. But overall it's that there's a lot of "being a trainer" which is dull, like watching somebody play Pokemon, and it can't be helped much because the topic of MC's story is "being a trainer, with complications." And I keep recalculating how much screen time certain characters should have and when I try to fix them the scenes go differently than expected and exacerbate the problems.

Plus, at 64k; longer than C/E and it's still Act F'n One. And then I told myself: "My god… what have I done?" Benjamin still can't reach the top shelf without help and he lost his role as auxiliary light source in like, Chapter 2. I tried giving myself an excuse to give him a heroic scene, and since I'm grousing about it, it didn't go as I thought that it would. He's so into his role that it's giving me the same kind of fits that MC's suffering with him. Quite a pokemon lead I wrote.

Also, portrayed dreaming happens, which I enjoy writing but probably everybody's sick to death of that. (Except if it means more LL someday.)

What a mess. RIP my everything plus one.
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This was worth the effort to make.
It fits my story in more than one way.

>>33438695
>too many errors
CE Ch 8, “Tio mentioned at dinner than him and I had a talk today” than -> that
EV Ch 3, "I found somebody better that you" that -> than

>>33440339
>everyone's decided they're sick of repeated species
I don't think anyone actually complained, just noticed. Now if you bring in a third meat loving herbivore you might have a problem.

>there's a lot of "being a trainer" which is dull
It wasn't an issue in CE.

>>33442045
Thank you.
I've gotta git gud someday.

>a third meat loving herbivore
Pokemon are omnivores. Some have forms that push them toward that ecological role.
But I did let a particular quadruped with antlers who gets a moment on-screen have a salad.

>It wasn't an issue in CE.
In writing C/E, I didn't yet know what I did and didn't enjoy writing. I was free to explore. But in O/C, I found a character that would naturally go into those territories. I had hoped that I would find by ordeal a new respect for them and a way to improve my flexibility. But instead, I find only the ordeal, which discourages me except in moments of inspiration—and waiting for inspiration is as bad as waiting for Godot.

What's worst is that I hoped to model O/C after C/E because I also wanted to recapture the fun I distantly remember experiencing when writing it, before LL became my burden and everything after it flopped.

Sometimes I think about writing original or another context, but that would be running away, and if there is anything I learned by finding my first try at fiction so many years ago, I can't escape myself.

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Managed to finally finish that Brendan/Zinnia smut. Title is a placeholder until I can come up with a better one.

https://pastebin.com/nab4AZv0

And here is another story, unrelated story based on a dream.

https://pastebin.com/YYHhCqVC

I still have a few other stories to write down.

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I'm planning out a car crash, and it's a lot of work.
Such as describing the nearby five-story Dupondiffe Embassy (for water dwellers) connected to Morrino Creek via a tunnel.
But it gave me an excuse to describe the Garden Hospital, and the Mayor's son, Gideon le Mercer (Serperior), one of the best doctors in the whole country.
If I didn't get that headache, I would have never thought of Ryan (Linoone) suffering a concussion.
You've got to look for the good in the bad.
After all, that steely guy didn't really get injured badly in the crash, right?
Ryan was delivering water because it was a particularly hot and humid day.
It is a bit ironic that somebody delivering water crashed in front of the Water embassy.
It also makes sense that in the most steel-heavy part of town, he would crash into a steel driver.
Car crashes just weren't very common, because there weren't very many cars. It was actually something that would happen about once a year in the whole city.

Can you drink the water generated by Water-type Pokemon?

>>33444356
In my stories: If you catch it quickly enough.

>>33444356
Nope. That's a good way to get sick. One of the first things they teach kids.

What would psychic training be like?
So far I've done learning to read and interpret emotions, what other 'basic' stuff could they learn?

>>33444356
You could but it might be salty.

>>33446392
Stuff I'd label as basic stuff for psychics:

>Telepathy, sharing thoughts and memories. Often used as a means of communication.
>Telekinesis, movement of objects.

Outside of those two would be more advanced abilities, such as precognition or offensive psychic abilities.

How one would train and develop these kind of abilities boils down to a combination of practice, exposure to psychic powers, and raw talent.

>>33446392
In the "Psychic Control 3" class, they learn how to carefully move boxes and practice sensing emotions.

>>33435192
Oh snap I almost missed this. Hi Snapath. I'm that OR of that Ribombee/Vespiquen. It's been a while. Nice to see that you're back up writing again. While I never read your main combee story, decided to give this chapter a read anyway.
The Chapter, I think, is pretty good. Pacing is nice with an evident focus between human/pokemon sections, efficient combat (especially for hordes) and a goal achieved: Evolution. Call it cliche, but I think CIS4 should've mulled over the decision to strike a downed Taranza (or used a better line/justification), considering he did plan to outright murder her in cold blood. For the last part, I think the combees should've waiting until evening or even before nightfall before asking her to join the group as a means to hammer down that 'they've been searching all day.'

I also begin to see how this story and the side story are linked, from the Ribombee's overhearing of the fight between queens to the exiled troops at the end of his story (or at least part 1 of it).

Either way nice to see you back on your feet! Once this story is done, do you still plan to do a sequel to that Ribombee sidestory?
In case a refresher you need, https://archive.nyafuu.org/vp/thread/32197388/#32223559

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Despite feeling miserable and having a headache, I've done two good things today:
The businesses surrounding six intersections in the City
-and-
what happened between Veliocasses and Tristia.

>>33447598
that's a funny looking Dragonite

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>>33447610

>>33448268
Quelle (a German mail-order company) has the funniest description though:
>Warum geht der Postmann so schell? Was bringt er, eines Geheimnis, eine Not, oder nur einface ein Liebesbrie? In dieser schwarze stuermische Nacht,
>Was hat Gott von Himmer nach unten schleudern?
>A-ha, aber es gibt noch viele Baueme, die durch die Luft fligen, Vielleicht koennen Sie ihn helfen, um der Postmann nach ruhiges Land zu bringen. Ein Tunnel? ein Dschungel? aber wer weiss was gibt es noch dahinter.

I'm not sure what "einface" or a "Himmer" is.

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>>33447610
The postman life changes you...

>>33447210
Hey, good to see you again. Thank you very much for reading that chapter, and for your commentary too! I'm happy to hear you liked the chapter.

>CIS4 should've mulled over the decision to strike a downed Taranza
>the combees should've waiting until evening or even before nightfall before asking her to join the group
Those are both valid points. I may modify the story a bit to implement them, though I'm not sure how well the second one would work. I don't want events to run too late into the night, and I also intended for 23 and 25 to be her first followers, so they can't wait too long to join her or else other Combee would join her first. Still, I'll keep your advice in mind.

Also, it's nice to know you noticed the connections between the stories.

Finally: yes, I do remember the sequel we talked about way back when, and I do still plan to write it, but probably not immediately after finishing this story. I believe it would be best for me to hold off on that, and instead write one or two short one-offs next (or better yet, finish one or two of the many unfinished one-offs I've started over the last year). I think that would help me get back into the swing of things and regain my confidence before tackling another multi-chapter work, like the sequel will be.
Right now, I'm nervous about starting another multi-chapter project, considering this 8-chapter Combee story is taking me a whole 11 months to finish. That's 9 more than it should have. I don't want to repeat that shameful display, so I'd rather wait a bit longer before writing the sequel, in order to prepare myself and ensure I actually finish the darn thing in a timely manner.
But rest assured, I will write it. Just not for a week or two. Or maybe three. Give or take.

>>33448516
The League life changes you, too. During his early, domestic years, that sneasel was called "Cuddles."

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>>33448957
>naming your Sneasel
>mfw this is a pivotal plot point in my most recent story
>>33448516
Great art as always.

>>33449578
Naming can be serious business. Especially if you want to use numerology as your story's /x/ gimmick.

>>33449666
Believe me, satan, I know. Already dabbled in far too much astrology.

>>33449721
>too much astrology.
You added asteroids to your charts, didn't you?

>>33449761
How did you figure that out? I'm impressed.
I left the system I established vague enough where it could work and now I'm a regular astronomy nerd.

>>33448516
That's what you get for losing a Weavile's mail.
By the way, that's a really good drawing, nice job

>>33435201
Following up on this. Short stories based on the darker dex entries/dex entries in general sounds like really comfy reading right now.

>>33449803
>How did you figure that out?
Because what's better than using some planets? Using zomg moar! of them.
>No transits.
>Ceres only.
>Final Destination.

>I'm a regular astronomy nerd.
You'll never ask or answer, "What's your sign?" the same way again.
And you'll be disappointed when they only know the sun signs.
>tfw you propose sharing a Venus Mars conjunction in your Leo fifth house and they don't get it.

>>33449825
And fast, if it was begun in response to its quoted post.
But Weavile et al didn't lose their mail, they were stealing the mail. Bad kitties. :3

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>>33450469
Nigga you are reach starcitizen tier for random cryptic bullshit said by people in the threads.

>>33450469
Left to right, in order of increasing popularity in Rule 34 and lemons.

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>>33450488
Still better than fake leaks.
Anything's better than fake leaks.

>>33450488
>Reaching StarCitizen tier

Nigger it IS StarCitizen, he couldn't hide himself on this thread if he finally set his keyboard to English and learned how to write

He's forever imprinted on our shitposter radar™, now Legendary Status™.

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>>33450650
Ha.
I did not notice that.

The columns from left to right are: Things, Birds, Arthropods, Plants, Fish, Reptiles, Mammals, and Ghosts.
They all feature metal, stone or bone in their designs.
The yellow, green and purple boxes are a distraction.
Are the cannons of Blastoise made of bone or metal?

>>33448898
Well I guess that makes sense. I don't mind the wait since your stuff comes out pretty good, even if it's been a while. I'll usually be here if you got questions if you need them.

>2300 words later.
I didn't see that coming.
Hopefully, my readers won't, either.
>2:30 am.
Oh no.

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Has anyone done anything interesting with the Altar of the Sunne/Moone Ultra Wormhole? I was just playing through Sun again and did the Cosmog event where you travel to, basically, Moon Alola with Solgaleo, and it made me think.

It could be an interesting way to write Selene and Elio as existing in completely separate universes where the other doesn't actually exist. And, obviously, it could do the same for the other game MCs. But, again, I'm guessing you guys figured this out 9+ months ago and already did it, and I just haven't read it in fics yet.

/incoherent middle-of-the-night ramblings

Bumo

>>33450796
Nah, he sounds more like latinanon

>>33452092
So how'd you come up with your location names? Rummaging through your mom's bathroom cabinet?

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11954449/1/Frantic-Heart
flame me pls

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>>33453888
Is StarCitizen the Spanish guy running sentences through a translator?
Pic related.

>>33454484
To start, you mean to say "respective" not "respectful."

Replace "he" with "Ruby" in the first sentence of the second paragraph, otherwise it sounds like Sapphire is the one that woke up and is also a boy.
Third sentence of the second paragraph is a massive, winding run-on, and is also passive, as the sentence is ostensibly setting Sapphire as its subject. By breaking the sentence up into three distinct chunks and ideas you'll avoid this.
Why is Ruby calling Nana "it?" Does he not know her sex?

Who is the narrator? Sapphire? Why is she referencing herself in the third person? Is it a very casual narrator? This means they need to be characterized properly.

Your overuse of fragments/short sentences is making your story exceptionally choppy, and it's also causing errors wherein you shift from using fragments for their choppiness to using fragments incorrectly and create incomplete ideas.

Stretch this advice over the rest of your prose and use it to clean it up and tighten it. Cut down on the constant fragments and the copious amounts of "telling" over "showing." This shouldn't just read as someone recounting a series of events dryly and then informing you why they're important - the importance should be readily apparent to anyone reading them.

Also, check your tenses as you keep slipping between present and past.

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>>33452237
Without gloating too much, my current fiction, Heaven's Slice, addresses the lore and consequences introduced with Ultra Space. It is still a work in progress however, and takes place in Orre rather than Alola. Some of your alleged middle-of-the-night ramblings have already taken shape in the AU, which means those bright ideas have not only resonated with you.

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>>33453897
>So how'd you come up with your location names?
Bibliomancy. Pic related.

>Rummaging through your mom's bathroom cabinet?
Ah, memories of the good old days come flooding back. Bandages with red strings in the wrapper, tubes of things a decade beyond their expiration date (if they had one), eye of newt, rest of newt… but, however awesome, those things don't much make for catchy city names in Pokemon fanfics.

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>>33455477
Good for you, now stop the blogposting

>>33455605
He contributed a bump with content.
You contributed a bump with complaint.

>>33455477
Do not declaw your weavile. How else will they spread their secret messages around the neighborhood?

>>33457083
They can squeeze koffings to make smoke signals.

>>33457083

With a knife if it's a smart one.

>>33454984
thx

>>33455477
>how it feels to declaw your cat

>>33459023
For cats, they take up to the joint.

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>>33455477
I don't know when else I'm going to ever need to use this picture so...

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>>33459161
And this Steel/Dark Type...

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>>33459173
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9iWgonJ85jY

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>>33455477
I imagine that bisharp will be elated to get the first hug of its whole life though

>>33460690
not if bisharp is autistic and it makes him uncomfortable

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Oh no, my computer's address bar is spazzing out again.
Hopefully, Microsoft Word will work...

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>>33461760
The blasted thing doesn't work!
I don't remember how I fixed it last time, either.
I just realized that today is Labor Day.
Today's also:
>Reciprocity Day
>Spontaneous Gifts to Loved Ones Day
>World Tattoo Day
>National Going to Boring Job Day
>Sex on the Beach Day

>>33460306
What kind of strange, otherworldly things happen when a dragon is the god of time?

>>33462145
>a Pokémon is god of anything
To the ancients and modern-day children running around with a Pokédex it may appear that way. However, meticulous research has revealed that no Pokémon is completely omnipotent. Even those creatures with the most fantastic world-changing powers have limitations tied to nature. With a proper strategy, they can be defeated or even have their own time-manipulating powers turned against themselves. Therefore, there is no godmon.
>strange, otherworldly things happen
This occurs all the time in a world where you've got ghosts, auras, psychics, pokeballs, etc.

>>33462276
Dialga is the literal physical embodiment/manifestation of time in the universe. Its abilities with regards to the manipulation of time are not limited by any outside mediator, but by its own internal biology and a lack of creativity. There is certainly no absolute physical law that says Dialga cannot be fended off in battle or even killed, but succeeding in the latter would completely erase time from existence, effectively ending the universe.

>>33462384
>defeating it would erase time
Nope. Been done before. World is still turning. Granted a new one may come into existence. They are not the laws of reality which you seem to be conflating them with.

>>33462412
It may have been persuaded to retreat or caused to faint, but it was not killed, or we would surely not be having this conversation.

>>33462464
Actually, I'm typing this reply while proudly seated upon the previous, now very much dead Dialga's corpse. It makes for a comfortable couch, though it is beginning to smell a little funky.
You can kill Pokémon and legendaries are no exception to the rule.

>>33462485
I can say with confidence that you are not, in fact, sitting on the Dialga's lifeless corpse, because the arrow of time is plainly moving on its merry way from the past through the present and to the future the way it has since Arceus brought Dialga into existence. Perhaps you have misidentified the corpse or more likely you are simply making the whole thing up.

And I reiterate: it is most certainly physically possible to kill Dialga, but it would be the last thing anyone in our universe does.

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>>33462630
When life gets you down, and a dragon representing a fundamental aspect of reality ceases to exist, make a new one.

>>33462630
>>33462464
>we would surely not be having this conversation
>not be having this conversation without our Lord Dialga's blessing of time
>the meme that your god is dead and rotting under my ass

The arrow of time is independent from Dialga. You are confusing an aspect of reality with a monster that abuses it to its own ends. At the heat death of the universe, I can assure you there will be no salvation for those who worship the beast.

>>33462674
Not sure why Arc**s would intervene like that seeing how it's pretty common sense that you should NOT kill the physical embodiment of time but sure I guess anything is possible.

>>33462710
>The arrow of time is independent from Dialga.
That is simply false. Time is Dialga and Dialga is time.

And don't group me with that weird sect of Dialgalites. I do not worship Dialga because it almost certainly doesn't notice or care, I simply acknowledge basic scientific truths.

>>33462787
>Time is Dialga and Dialga is time.

>And don't group me with that weird sect of Dialgalites. I do not worship Dialga because it almost certainly doesn't notice or care, I simply acknowledge basic scientific truths.

Nothing you said is scientific. You just said A is B and B is A. You're no better than the zealots you seek to distance yourself from.

>>33462803
You biocosmology deniers are the worst. THE SCIENCE IS SETTLED!

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First time writing inhuman on human smut

NSFW: Rosa fucking her Garchomp
https://pastebin.com/5XCWXk8D

Tell me how the syntax works, I need to know if this is enough to masturbate to or if it needs more effort, and any other issues that you have

>>33462907
fucking typo in the last paragraph I just noticed, goddamnit

>33462898
Pathetic retort. Not worth a (You).

>>33462907
Little clunky at the start but it picks up nicely.

>>33462412
Game mechanics?

>>33462384
Time controls Dialga just as much as Dialga controls time, because of the way that causality works.
This means that if you're fucking with time itself, Dialga will convulse.

>>33463072
Perhaps using more than two measly words will constitute a valid point of view?

>>33463072
>Time controls Dialga just as much as Dialga controls time, because of the way that causality works.
>This means that if you're fucking with time itself, Dialga will convulse.
Scientist making a time machine and accidentally bringing Dialga to orgasm when

>>33463154
do it!

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>>33463182
I'd be too tempted to make it a dark story of godlike entities manipulating humans for their own ends, probably tragically. Or maybe something madness-inducing.

I'm sure someone else can write something better in twenty minutes

>>33463241
tag somebody

>>33463090
The reason that the term "Game Mechanics" is so useful is because it is shorthand for a very long definition.
Whenever programmers implement something not because it is more rational or logical but because it is more (universally accessible to all players) or easier to program, this is "sacrificing the best canon or logical actions in a franchise for the sake of ease of access by players or programming by developers"
"Canon and common sense ignored by the programmers for the sake of ease of access and of programming the games" doesn't have the same ring to it, don't you think?
There are two motivations:
1. It's easier for the developers.
2. It's easier for the players.
There are two consequences:
1. Existing continuity is blatantly ignored.
2. These "game mechanics" are carried back over into the other media (e.g. the anime), detracting from their quality.
3. The cycle repeats, eventually producing a web of contradictions.

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>>33463244

>>33463253
I feel that I haven't properly explained myself for such a broad topic, so I'll cover each subject (of many) individually.
Let's start with Egg Groups.
Why were they invented?

>>33463253
>The reason that the term "Game Mechanics" is so useful is because it is shorthand for a very long definition.

It's not at all though. I have no idea what you mean unless you type it because I'm not a psychic. You could be referring to literally anything designed by a game studio.

>Whenever programmers implement something not because it is more rational or logical but because it is more (universally accessible to all players) or easier to program, this is "sacrificing the best canon or logical actions in a franchise for the sake of ease of access by players or programming by developers"

That's the definition then. I appreciate your elaboration.

>"Canon and common sense ignored by the programmers for the sake of ease of access and of programming the games" doesn't have the same ring to it, don't you think?

Not really because those terms are needlessly complex for what you are trying to say in your definition.

>There are two motivations:
>1. It's easier for the developers.
>2. It's easier for the players.
>There are two consequences:
>1. Existing continuity is blatantly ignored.
>2. These "game mechanics" are carried back over into the other media (e.g. the anime), detracting from their quality.
>3. The cycle repeats, eventually producing a web of contradictions.

Would it not be a goal for a serious author to untangle these contradictions in a cohesive story? Writers are not affiliated with GF besides their use of IP.

>>33463337
My guess is that the programmers, while implementing the Pokémon breeding system, had a few goals in mind.
>1. We can't let the kiddies know too much.
>2. Everyone should be able to do it with their active party members.
>3. Produce a system with as few bugs, glitches, or unintended consequences as possible.
>4. Do this as easily as possible.
The 1st, 2nd, 3rd and 4th reasons are why all Pokémon lay eggs.
Pregnancy would be doubly complicated to implement in the game (would you need to remove them from your active party?), and even though the daycare could have possibly obviated this problem, Game Freak chose to ignore this for the sake of "Game Mechanics".

This contradicted the Pokémon mansion journal entry "Mew gave Birth".

The 1st and 2nd reasons are why Pokémon of different species can breed. Game Freak assumed that most players were unwilling to catch more than one of the same Pokémon to use in their active party, so they decided to ignore common sense in favor of "Game Mechanics".

The 3rd and 4th are why Nidoqueen can't breed. They will never fix this because it is now a "Game Mechanic"

The 3rd is why (almost all) Legendary Pokémon are "Gender Unknown". Even though we have clearly seen a mother Lugia in the Anime and have read about a Mew giving birth, Game Freak eschews this in favor of "Game Mechanics". Allowing players to breed Legendary Pokémon would devalue them.
I understand their motivation here completely, but I seriously wish that they would have done it the simpler way: not letting you put Legendary Pokémon into the day-care.
If Pokémon Gold and Silver had never been released, but the Anime and Manga had kept going, would we have gotten something better and more logical than our current Pokémon breeding system?

>>33463599
The 1st, 3rd and 4th reasons are also why the Day-care is used.

Egg groups were made as a sort of inadequate "rationalization" of the current system: supposedly not allowing Pokémon that are too different to breed, but based on some arbitrary groupings that still produce illogical results. (e.g. Wailord and Skitty are in the same Egg Group.)

>>33463241
>godlike entities manipulating humans for their own ends
So like forcing humans to create and use time machines for unlimited temporal orgasms on demand? That's a more legitimate motivation than most villains get in fan-fiction, especially pseudo omnipotent ones.

>>33463969
That was the general idea. And, though I know it doesn't need to be said, that's a pretty damning indictment of the state of fanfiction.

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I'll come back to my examination of "Game Mechanics" later.
Right now, I'm thinking about life in the sea vs. life on land.

>For most of its history, the sea was isolated (like China).
>But it was only in the past sixty years or so that Pokémon on land developed the technology to breathe underwater--discovering a whole new world, with a culture even more different from "our world".
>Everything in the water is a little bit like zero-gravity. It's hard to build permanent structures.

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Are berries an important part of the pokemon diet or are they just curatives? Is eating human food bad, or at least inadequate, for pokemon? How do you tell them "no" when they ask why they can't have "people"-food.

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>>33465336
Berries are consumed by people and Pokemon alike, and do indeed have curative properties. The effects are less pronounced for humans than they are pokemon, and are voided when cooked into food for either.

Human food cannot be treated with a blanket "yes or no" for Pokemon. Some Pokemon can subsist on human food alone without any special supplements, while others have diets so specialized that human food is at best useless and at worst toxic. Varieties of "Pokemon chow" for different species and types exists for purchase across every region.

Finally, most species that require extremely specialized diets (such a the Geodude line) will outright ignore or refuse human food when offered and consume berries purely for their curative effects. For those that want human food but shouldn't have any - you're on your own. You better hope its not a particularly cute Pokemon or you'll be stuck treating its stomachache afterwards.

Whether a Pokemon eats at your table with you or not is a function of your wishes as a Trainer and likely influenced by the bond you have with your Pokemon as well as the region you hail from.

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>>33463241
>I'm sure someone else can write something better in twenty minutes
The draft is 4k, so a little longer than twenty minutes, but I think it's something better.

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>>33463241
>>33464002
>that's a pretty damning indictment of the state of fanfiction.
Alright, let's damn it all the way. Dialga, you're about to contribute your best for the sake of SCIENCE!
Plus we're doing the title in machine-translated Latin for bonus creditus.

Tempus Venit.
>Sometimes saving the world, or at least making progress toward a doctorate, requires a hands-on approach.
NSFW in three ways: Dialga dong, shower scene, cge humor.
http://archiveofourown.org/works/12004665
>(Curses! After all that damnation, I missed the devil trips by one.)

I gave it only one revision/proof pass, so it's probably rife with errors.

>>33467627
You absolute madman

>>33467637

>I'm sure someone else can write something better
↓
>CHALLENGE ACCEPTED.

But, will the challenge be overcome? That's for the readers to decide.

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>>33466709
It's easier to think of modern society functioning with only Pokémon, than to think of ANY society whatsoever functioning underwater.
You can't use fire underwater, so you can't smelt ore or even glass, that precious transparent SOLID letting through the precious light.
At least you won't get sunburnt.
Liquids can't be kept outside of sealed containers.
Structures have trouble standing up, because of ocean currents.
Most metal will rust, but you can't make the metal because you can't smelt it, and it's not as good as glass (which is made from silica sand, easily accessible on the bottom of the ocean. It's waterproof, but it has a high melting point. So I'll assume that in the far past, a powerful fire-type provided the Water Society with a ton of glass that they used to build like, what, just three major cities?)
Dirt turns to mud, and you can't dry/cook bricks underwater.
Walls don't work because the ceilings (usually) don't work, and you can just swim up over them.
Roofs wouldn't be sloped, because there is no rain. They would likely be made of glass, to let in as much sunlight as possible. There is no point in putting the door on the side of the house when it can go on the ceiling.

It's too wet for books, ink won't stay in its bottle and there are no underwater trees with which to make paper.

You can't write into the mud because the current will wipe it away.

Most underwater animals don't have thumbs. Or legs. Or faces that convey emotions. Crap, this is a toughie.

All excreted waste can't be easily removed by anything except ocean currents, inb4 DESIGNATED SHITTING BEDS
Agriculture isn't really possible, even though you wouldn't need to worry about droughts.

It feels as if there is some kind of conspiracy against society developing underwater.
I have thought, however, that since electricity couldn't properly work underwater, the society would be based on the steam engine.
I'll go wherever the logic takes me, I guess?

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>>33465336
>Are berries an important part of the pokemon diet or are they just curatives?
A bit of both, I'd wager. Pokemon probably wouldn't hesitate to eat them for sustenance, but I think they'd also recognize their special medicinal properties and use them as curatives when the need arose.
>Is eating human food bad, or at least inadequate, for pokemon?
It probably depends on the specific type of food you mean, as well as the specific Pokemon. Most likely, some Pokemon species could handle human food and might even benefit from it, while others may find it unhealthy or even deadly.
>How do you tell them "no" when they ask why they can't have "people"-food.
If you're telling them "no" because it might harm them, you could just tell them that it's dangerous for them to eat it. They'd understand. Pokemon seem smarter than real-life animals, so they'd be able to comprehend what you're saying.
If you're telling them "no" for a different reason, you'd need to come up with a suitable explanation yourself.

>>33465526
>The effects [...] are voided when cooked into food
That may be the case, but they can sometimes acquire new effects to make up for it, if the Lumiose Juice Shoppe is anything to go by. The berry juices they make there all have different effects than the berries they're made from: some juices alter EVs, others boost friendship, and still others increase the drinker's level.
Of course, this is all assuming the juices don't actually derive those effects from certain unmentioned ingredients besides the berries.

>>33467850
>the society would be based on the steam engine.
It can't; conductive and convective contact with the water outside the vessel will prevent the water inside the vessel from ever coming to boil, unless you boil the whole ocean. You can't vacuum-seal the system for insulation without technology that would assume sophisticated metallurgy or glassmaking. You can't build it underground to escape the water because the ground is saturated and won't hold structure anyway.

There's much easier ways of power generation down there, anyway, but for 'power' to even be a thing you need the industrial capacity not just to produce the copper wire but sufficient insulation, which is subject to the same limitation steam engines are. You should have listened to yourself when you said it'd be very different. Give up the idea that they've been hidden away

Also, if you really want to blogpost about your autistic worldbuilding, do it when the thread needs a bump or it's relevant to a question.

>>33467931
Juices are something I left out entirely as having boosted effects. They're just incredibly tasty. Things like EVs are replaced by "you naturally become better at something the longer you do it", and things like boosting friendship is a product of it being a tasty drink you're getting your Pokemon as a treat or reward for a job well done. Level boosting doesn't exist either, its just a dose of nutrition for the pokemon that helps them grow - same with Rare Candies.

That said, mixing together Pecha berries and Razz berries to create a pie filling or compote for pancakes is fucking delicious.

>>33467627
>"Big D"
I chuckled.
>>33467940
https://www.youtube.com/watch?time_continue=365&v=3wqIiTABoNo

>>33467627
That's some good title game. I didn't notice any errors.

I bet Sinnoh would be pretty salty to find out one of their gods was slumming it in a breeding facility.

>>33467850
>You can't use fire underwater, so you can't smelt ore or even glass
Hyrdothermal vents?

>>33471915
The problem is that the heat and pressures at those levels cause the water to become supercritical.
It's hot enough to melt pure tin or lead at atmospheric pressures, but I'm not sure how they would behave at the bottom of the ocean. Perhaps somebody who has good knowledge of oceanography and chemistry would know the answer.
Or would tin or lead oxidize at such a high temperature underwater, making them useless?
I can't find any information saying if pewter will oxidize at extremely high pressures in saltwater, but it's probably safe to assume that it would.

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You're in the 1%.

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In one day, Tempus Venit has more hits on AO3 than any of Trick Candle, Nor Gloom Of Night, Drawn Straws, or Any Port since I added them there.

Readers love science!

I should rewrite O/C to put more emphasis on science.

So, did anyone in this thread write any of the fics on here?

http://www.thepokemontower.com/tpt.shtml

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>>33475660
This made me very sad, seeing a piece of a world I never knew.
If I could turn back the clock to see the days when the Internet still felt fresh, when its history was short, I would take that chance.
Where has the time gone? In 2009, YouTube didn't have such a large amount of "old" videos, but now...
Just think that in a decade from now, everything we ever said will be a decade old, just a distant memory of what it actually was. Like the burnt shadows of people on the walls produced by the bombs at Hiroshima and Nagasaki.
Our desires for permanence and novelty seem to contradict each other.
This is why our hearts long so much for Eternity; because in Eternity, everything is just beginning, nothing gets old. Nothing is corrupt, nothing is destroyed, all is surviving, everything extant.

>>33475993
>everything we ever said will be a decade old
>a decade
Entry level.

>>33475993
>This is why our hearts long so much for Eternity
Speak for yourself, or don't speak at all.

>>33436400
little miss tumblrina, what are you doing here?

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Did Alola anon ever release part 3 of his sableye story? Or anything else?

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>>33475146
Maybe I should've called it Tempus Fugit: It just passed V&V and is on its way to displacing Waterlogged to become the best one-chapter in my catalogue in under two days. I wonder if it's too scientific for contemporary FFN? What little I've heard is that there are busybodies ruining the fun these days. Perhaps I'll write a non-canonical scene in O/C to let me step into the story and have Benjamin read my future regarding if I should post it at FFN or not.

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>>33481047
>just passed V&V
Eh, not surprising. Not many not-quite-one-shots collections get popular.
>displacing Waterlogged
No accounting for taste or shitty search/browse functions

I'm not too familiar with the adult content take down people, but I haven't heard anything about it for quite awhile. FFN's official policy is that they allow M rated content but not MA. They define that as: "Fiction M can contain adult language, themes and suggestions. Detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature is considered Fiction MA." I don't think it's very likely that your story would get removed given how many far more explicit stories have been around for many years without even a pretense of plot.

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>That feel when you get your first kudos on something you slaved over

>>33481568
>Not many not-quite-one-shots collections get popular.
*shrugs* V&V is ahead of the other four mentioned at the 24-hour mark.
>shitty search/browse functions
That could be an issue for them, and it influenced how I released LL. If you backdate a submission at AO3, it'll be sorted way back in the stacks even though you just uploaded it. I haven't tired, but perhaps one could do the opposite, re-dating a story to today to go back to the top. (Begun, the AO3 date sorting wars have.) So someday I need to fix the dates on LL's chapters but for the time being they're re-release dates instead of approximately original release dates. Especially now that I have a 2017 release so I won't be missing that button on the year list. (I had no release in 2015 and my OCD is off the charts.)
>MMA
It'd probably skate fine (D/P never caught flak) but I would regret suffering a setback because St Elmo's Fire, a farlabot that was the only comment I received there on Drawn Straws, could decide to this time go beyond asking if I am a non-native speaker. :)

>>33481585
(That's a thumbs up, in case the filter ate it.)
Was it signed or anonymous?

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>>33481047
I typed up a long comment explaining this picture better, but it accidently got deleted when my computer froze.
Serves me right for procrastinating. A window (fucking Mashable, I was reading about "Hector the Tree") was running in the background, slowly accumulating unfinished processes until my computer slowed down to become unusable. I restarted it, but my comment was not preserved. Lesson: never leave clickbait websites open in the background

I love science; I was reading college biology books in third grade.
I love having it in my story so much that I took all the aquatic non-reptile non-bird non-mammal Pokémon and organized them into five categories: Proper fish, Molluscs, "Simple" (Cnidarians and "Worms"), "Crunchy" (Crustaceans and Aquatic Arthropods), and "Fifth" (Echinoderms and possessed objects).
Mainly because I have no idea how they would reproduce unless I categorize them first.
Remember that 99% of Pokémon SHOULD be water-type, if they followed Earth's biodiversity patterns.

>>33482162
>if they followed Earth's biodiversity patterns.
They instead follow humanity's environmental patterns. Like, we think that bananas and dinosaurs are cool, so we get Tropius. And we like ice cream so we get flying nightmare cones. And we liek mudkips so we get mudkips.

>processes
I know that feel. Even on Linux, there have been some disappointing incidents.

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>>33481942
Filter was hungry. A golem for your efforts.

It was signed. Made my day, as uneventful as that sounds. Either way I'd continue writing because there's a story to be chronicled; however, it's positively encouraging while I finish my revisions on chapter 6 of HS. Godspeed to you as well in your endeavors.

>>33482704
>Made my day, as uneventful as that sounds.
If somebody cared enough to comment/acknowledge, then for that person, you prevented their day from being uneventful.

bramp

>>33482162
Why are you lumping echinoderms with possessed objects?

>>33484958
Are they really possessed or is that lore? Maybe the objects are habitat for the life form around/within it? like hermit crabs using found shells.

>>33484958
No eyes, radial symmetry, and the category was too small as it is. So it might as well be for "everything else".
Sure, Dhelmise is technically seaweed.

>>33485486
There are only nine so far who evade classification:
Gyarados
Vaporeon
Kabutops
Ludicolo
Milotic
Gorebyss
Rotom-Wash
Volcanion
Tapu Fini
I haven't finished yet, but I did check through all the Water-types. So far, my classification system is doing well.

>>33485532
Half of that list is easy though

>Gyarados, Milotic, Gorebyss
Clearly fish if you consider Eelektross one

>Kabutops
Crunchy

>Vaporeon
Mamalian

I don't want people to eat Pokémon. Is making their flesh indigestible by humans too convenient?

>>33485865
you could just...not mention pokemon being eaten by humans.

>>33485865
>>33485896
What about Pokémon eating humans?

>>33485865
Nature's a cruel bitch, son. Does shit we don't like. Angry knifecats raid nests for eggs and eat 'em. Shit don't seem fair to the birds that laid 'em, but that's how it is Jack.

Now quit whining and eat your Bouffalant steak.

>>33486251
>Angry knifecats raid nests for eggs and eat 'em. Shit don't seem fair to the birds that laid 'em, but that's how it is Jack.
It's okay, they follow Deuteronomy 22:6-7.

>>33486251

Who said they only raid the nests of Flying-types? They're just the most obvious raids and the easiest for newly mature ones to carry out. Sneasel packs hunt for bigger and better game, leaving the young to hunt on their own to hone their skills.

I've seen a Usaring den after the little bastards raided it and stole eggs. Left the female without an arm and one of those cats lost their tails. Blood was everywhere. Think they took the females hatched young as well- or their corpses at least.

Geez I haven't been around here in a while.

It's good to see you people. Well, most of you at least. I don't know who the anons are, though I'm hoping any people bringing up discussion and commentary is welcome.

Since I was away for the Aug Eclipse, question: what would happen to a Rockruff that evolves during one? Any difference between evolving under the total umbra or only under the partial?

I'm only catching up to the discussions in part of the thread and several stuff that I would have covered has been already, so I'm off to grab lunch.

>>33486582
>what would happen to a Rockruff that evolves during one?
It explodes. SolarSystem used SOLAR BEAM! It's super-effective!

>>33486582
>what would happen to a Rockruff that evolves during one?
Dawn Forme obviously, despite the misnomer. Why do you think they're so rare as to be event-exclusive?

>>33487733
>Dawn Forme obviously, despite the misnomer. Why do you think they're so rare as to be event-exclusive?
Because Ash breaks his alarm clocks and wakes up too late for dawn. Which is why a trivial temp job pimping her rabbit was enough of an excuse for Dawn to get away from his never-a-champion ass.

>>33485865
The problem with saying Pokemon aren't edible is that it's disproved in both the game and anime canons: the dex in the games says Basculin is "tasty", and the dex in the anime says Farfetch'd "makes a delicious meal".
Of course, you're always free to deviate from canon if you choose, so you can ignore those statements if you want. However, if you do so, you should come up with an explanation for the deviation. Maybe say the dex was wrong when it said those two species are edible (which isn't hard to believe considering all the absurd stuff the dex has said before), or make a compromise by saying Basculin and Farfetch'd are indeed edible but all other Pokemon are not.
Alternatively, you could do what that one anon said earlier and just never bring the subject up, which is fine so long as it doesn't create more problems.
Or you can pull a 180 and embrace the carnivore within you, and say humans eat Pokemon all the time. It's all up to you.

>>33486582
Good to see you too. Welcome back.
Luckily for you, I have an answer to your question, because my uncle works at Nintendo: a Rockruff that evolves during an eclipse will become the all-new Eclipse Form of Lycanroc. It looks like a recolored Midnight Lycanroc, but without the hairdo.

>>33487784
>which isn't hard to believe considering all the absurd stuff the dex has said before
Slowpoke tails are canon in the diegesis, not only dex. It must be accepted; with drawn butter.

>>33487827
I always preferred slowpoke tail in a stew, except some barbaric fucking Unovans think adding reuniclus jelly to it is a good idea.

"Pleasantly thickened" my right foot. It's like eating jello with potatoes in it.

>>33487996
Just like Mom used to make.

>>33487784
I'll probably just have them eat Fire/Fighting starters.
There are a lot of them, and they cook themselves.

>>33488879
The meat's quite tough.

>>33488893
Meat is mostly muscle.

>>33486807
>explodes
Why are you mean to doggo
Why

>>33487765
This made me laugh more than it made me lol.

>>33485865
>>33487784
Though cookies, yes: Pokémon have been part of the food chain for humans, and there's little reason to think the opposite has not been a norm at some point too.

If you want your people to "not eat Pokémon" tho, you can make of that a growing trend rather than an invariant that somehow just happens to be there. Like, okay, Slowpoke tails might be tasty but they have been falling or are fallen out of favour so they become rare - hey, it is TR selling them after all.

But it will never go away. It might be sensible to just leave it in the background except for the rare occurrence for weirdness points, like the games and anime already do.
>>33487784
>during an eclipse
>inb4 it requires actually pointing your 3DS camera to an occurring eclipse.
>welcome to Nintendo Macrotransactions. Yes, macro. Partnership with American Airlines and who knows what other shit.

>>33488143
that's what she said.

>>33489132
>>during an eclipse
>>inb4 it requires actually pointing your 3DS camera to an occurring eclipse.
Tape gameboy to reflector telescope, aim at variable star, pray for explosion.
>Congratulations! Your STONER420LOL evolved into Nova Forme Lycanroc!

Special doggo is most special when special doggo creates bright spots, heavy elements, and planetary nebulae.

>>33489132
>Slowpoke tails might be tasty
"Its long tail often breaks off. It doesn't really feel any pain, though, and the tail grows back, so Slowpoke isn't particularly bothered. "

>>33488879
Well, the Tepig line is pork and the Torchic line is poultry, and those are two of the most commonly consumed meats in real life. Perhaps the Pokemon world wouldn't be so different in that regard, and those two lines of Pokemon might be commonly eaten by humans.
Still, I've always found it strange to think of starters as being used for anything except companionship and combat. But I guess there's always the possibility that there are special breeds of starters meant specifically for providing meat, and humans only eat those breeds, while using other breeds for companionship and battling.