Pokémon Fanfiction General and Writethread

>>32472842
Last thread fics

Something about Zinnia SFW
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RHZNPytJ7EnYPwYX25hIBBQvzl0NTsTIuDKA5uA7N6A/edit?usp=sharing

A translated thing SFW
https://pastebin.com/xqnTfP2T

The dark type greater things chapter 11
http://archiveofourown.org/works/9113758/chapters/23634723

Deerling greentext NSFW
https://pastebin.com/REY54Xwq

Fledglings chapter 51
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11084689/51/Fledglings

Princess lilligant and baby's first battle SFW
https://pastebin.com/gWcz5pW8

Vines of deceit chapter 5
http://archiveofourown.org/works/9294437/chapters/23857794

A...Mew me?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12231883/1/A-Mew-Me

Mimiga docs
http://archiveofourown.org/works/7771954/chapters/23870925

Combee story chapter 5
https://pastebin.com/0K7wKm9N

Gift of protector chapter 20
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10121590/20/Gift-of-the-Protector-Radiant-Heart

What Blue Eyes See] #1 "Lava Walker" SFW
http://archiveofourown.org/works/9113758/chapters/24039777

Trainer fucks a lil messy thicc hex maniac NSFW
https://archiveofourown.org/works/10831332

Link other stories that are missing here

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I love Pokemon fanfiction

Didn't get a response in the last thread, so I thought I'd ask again: does anyone know of any good fanfiction dating back from the early days of the franchise, eg the Pokemania era? Pokemon Master is the only one I can think of.

>>32473588
>Pokemon Master is the only one I can think of.
that might be it!
fanfiction wasn't a thing to do for 90's kids. mostly they were too busy playing Pokemon and being mad when they had to write for class because then they weren't playing Pokemon

>>32473791
More than I know. The earliest fanfiction I would've known about would've sourced from the end of the second gen. I was directed once to a fic that was written in the early days of the fandom, which was surprising because the idea of genders was not present yet, but they had assigned them anyway, and there were females involved. I forget what it was called.

I was wondering if you could help me track down an ancient bit of /vp/-written smut about a female OC trainer and her tentacruel getting it on in a hotel room after getting knocked out of the pokemon league?

It's not on the google doc catalogue on account of being so old, and I think it may just be lost forever at this point.

>>32473108
I can't read this shit and not think of Futari Wa, so I'm fine with it.

Okay, so, last thread, I did very little, outside of posting my finished chapter 1. I think it's mainly because I got tired out again really quickly. That and diverging interests. Sonic Forces, Mania and Mario Odyssey have me hyped, but I don't think I'll be able to get to the apex so I can take advantage of writing for them until E3. No Pokemon game in sight as well.

Luckily, I don't think I'll run into a similar situation as I did with Sun and Moon. I held off on a lot of the plot details because I wanted to see if I could include things form Sun and Moon in the fic. I remember in a really early draft, back when Sun and Moon were releasing trailers, the Hoopa Man had a Type: Null. Even beyond the fact that there are only three and it probably wouldn't have been made yet, it still wouldn't have made a lot of sense for the character. I have a much better idea of who the character is now and what pokemon he would have. Just like the story. It was a lot looser before I actually began writing the first chapter. Now it's a lot tighter in my head, so me wanting to incorporate things from newer games wouldn't make too much sense. The only possible exception is Diamond and Pearl remakes. And even then, I probably won't run into wanting to use too much from it.

I'll keep the Doc open for people to view at their leisure. Just please don't be disappointed in me when five months pass and all I have so far is Hoopa Man stealing a cart of donuts.

>ToTT
I prefer reading on mobile, generally before bed. Writing I prefer on the computer at a time when I can focus. I'm generally always called by my online friends, so I can barely ever get any work done.

>>32473108
everyone starts somewhere

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>>32473108
>(it's like Goku's Kamehameha)

wew

>Ttot
Haven't really read a fic in a long time, been focusing on some books in my backlog. But either way i usually read on my mobile at night. If i'm really into it, during the day i'll continue reading on my computer.

>TotT

If it's a single chapter from something updated or whatever, I'll likely use my PC, but for anything that takes more than 10-15 mins I'm usually on my phone.

So much more comfy, especially cause its cold as fuck where I am and blankets are gods greatest gift.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GGfz7ptRjgM

>>32472842
>Where do you prefer reading or writing your fic, on the computer? Mobile? In a busy setting?
I do both on a Surface- keyboard is phenomenal and thing's portable as hell. Screen's lovely too.

>>32472842
ToTT: I write and read exclusively at home, though I do use my phone to read stuff when I want to spell check.

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>New chapter (21) of Protector

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10121590/21/Gift-of-the-Protector-Radiant-Heart

>ToTT:
I've written on my phone before, desperate times, and would not recommend it because editing becomes a special kind of hell. Can't be helped, I'm mobile a lot and my brain moves quicker when my body's in motion so ideas often hit me at inconvenient times. I prefer to use a computer when I can of course. A laptop on the couch is more comfy than at the desk. I'll read pretty much anywhere on my phone and blend in with the rest of the zombies staring at their devices playing microtransaction filled games or whatever else is in vogue.

Can somebody post lonk to fanfic about snuggly lilligany? Because catalog ueis not much updated and i cant find it.

>>32476074
https://pastebin.com/0Xc7kTrf

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Here's to the death of romance! we killed it

>TotT

Recently I've been listening to fics via Natural Reader at work whenever I'm not listening to music or podcasts. Feels like a slightly robotic audiobook.

>>32476494
U wot

I had an idea in my head of a fic where a Gallade needs to get his leg amputated because it got wounded really bad and he falls into a deep depression but recovers. Do you think it's a cringey idea or is it good?

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>>32473108
>It's like Goku's Kamehameha

>>32476783
Execution is what that idea lives and dies on.

>>32476783
It has the potential to go either way depending on how you write it.

>>32477476
Uh, thanks for the ( You ) I guess, but posting like that's really not helpful to anyone at all

>>32477852
What did he mean by this?

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>>32473108

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Holding on hope for female frillish story

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Finally got back in the groove last night

>>32480218
I'm goin, I'm goin! There's a lotta rad shit going on nowadays, it's hard to concentrate on requests when it's double luck week in Guild Wars 1.

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>>32481250
>Guild Wars 1
I need to log into my account from years ago now.

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>>32481361
Get going, boyo. Writing and games with good writing are excuses for each other.

>>32481024
lewds?

>>32481566
Not this time. But very likely won't be the last installment in their story

Busy!

>>32481996
cruel tease

I found a new pmd story to share.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12455256/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Mystery-Dungeon-The-Corrupted-Wish

The summary is pretty much on point for once: "Little Jirachi is hard at work, fulfilling wishes and making the world a better place. At the same time, Chikorita, an amateur herbalist, and Bulbasaur, an amnesiac with a troubling propensity for violence, have joined together and set about terrorizing the area under the pretense that they are "explorers". Updated daily."

The plot isn't very far along yet and the tone seems like it will be fairly dark, but it's pretty good so far.

>two grass starters can only end well

>>32483335
No room for it in this story, that's all. Next time. That one will be much longer so maybe more than one!

>>32472842
>ToTT
reading? Mobile. computer for desktop.
I think id be better off writing on mobile but im really fucking paranoid that someone would find out what I'm writing.

>>32472842
Normally I wouldn't be suggesting anything, but thanks to that picture I am going to suggest a fanfic about a trainer interacting with his tsundere Roselia (a Roserade would be acceptable too). Nothing lewd necessarily but I wouldn't object.

>>32483814
this seems promising, nice share anon

>>32476783
Might break canon since the ralts line is amorphous.

I'm looking more in do a little realisitic fic... with a normal characters, but with a background of an exilied demigod looking for revenge... open to critics and comments.

https://pastebin.com/H8Zc2udk

>>32485165
This would do extremely well in the comedy genre.

>>32485165
Why are there so many fucking ellipses?
Why are you in a long-distance relationship with grammar measurable in AU?
What are any of these terms mentioned?
Why the fuck is a demigod talking to Calem and Serena?
Why did he give a thumbs up and die?
Why didn't he make an :ok_hand: instead?

Why the fuck did you even write this?

>>32484439
What if the trainer and the rose are both tsundere and the punchline is everyone has to deal with their thorns?

>>32485384
Sorry meant for
>>32484462

Epilogue!

>>32485384
>>32485388
Now that's a perfect premise. Like trainer, like Pokemon. Or is it the other way around?

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>>32486645
>Like trainer, like Pokemon
That's been a central theme in my next story. So far there's an internet-savvy thief with her sneaky Sneasel, an eager detective who solves community crimes alongside a dutiful Buizel, and a few other human characters that share similar personalities with their Pokemon friends. Your request for tsundere Roselia gave me the thought, why not include a fellow rookie trainer at the guild (where Sneasel and her trainer find work) have similar personality traits as well: a tough, rough exterior with a soft, sweet, nougaty center. They are assigned to the same mission due to plot reasons requiring an all-female expedition crew following strange rumors of a "man"-eating Pokemon, and the rest practically writes itself. This story is serious at times, but overall lighthearted DITL compared to what I'm used to publishing.

Not sure if that's exactly what you were hoping for since this would be a character showing up in chapter 5, but I have to give you credit for the idea. Thanks anon.

>Or is it the other way around?
That's also very possible.

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r'ing a fic in which dawn tries to be cyrus' therapist

>>32485201
More like a commedy as I realized that my demigod is only a mere watcher... and I want to see more how the interaction with a chaotic lawful demigod could change tha game rules.

https://pastebin.com/ggHjGJig

>>32487433
So, I what form you want the fic, I mean, Dawn tries to threat Cyrus from his childhod traumas.

>>32486337
?????

>>32487898
Nigga do you listen yourself at all. A chaotic lawful demigod? What the fuck kind of fucked up alignment system do you operate on?

Here's the short of it: your writing is poor, nonsensical and clearly is the result of someone with only a tenuous grasp of English trying to write in English. Use your native tongue, because you don't have the vocabulary of grammatical understanding to try it in English, that's for fucking sure.

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>>32485165
Dear god..

We have given you advice, yet every time you ignore it and return to rambling incoherently about this demigod and type III civilisations and 'flawed mary sues' (lol) and alien gods and whatever the fuck else.

My recommendation is to either entirely drop this whole demigod bullshit or stop focusing on them so much and have him appear much less frequently.

Also, more than two paragraphs would go a long way toward helping understand your insanity.

>stayed up too late writing last night
>wake up to lost progress and no recovery option
why do I live

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>>32488580
Did you forget to configure your text editor?

>>32488629
the recovery feature worked well recently, just not this time. I guess I'll poke autosave

>>32488058 >>32488010
Ok, then I will write it in Spanish but if anyone understand it...

>>32489654
I think that you're better off writing fluently now and making an English version later. You might even snag a bi-lingual who can help you learn the nuances of English literature. From the few paragraphs I looked at, you're translating okay, but creating literature takes fluency for granted (both of the author and reader) and adds a layer of artistic expression on top. I'll make a sample from your second clip.

>Then, the alien astronaut gasped and then he woke up, he was on a perfect white hospital room, in one of the windows he could see his home planet... it's was beautiful from the polar orbit where the space station that functioned like hospital was, then he realized that he was at least alive, and anything that he even had dreamed was only an hallucination, provoked by the choke by low oxigen...

There are a number of small errors to fix, but your paragraph is understandable. Now, let's make it smooth:

>Awakening with a gasp, an alien astronaut awakened in a hospital room. Glancing at a window set inside one of the room's plain, perfectly white walls, he glimpsed his beautiful home planet and realized that he was in a polar orbit, and alive. All that he saw before, it must've been a hallucination brought by oxygen deprivation.

The content is the same, but I've rearranged it so that the little pieces of establishment work together to form sentences, rather than being choppy bits arranged in a line. Study some English literature to become familiar with the grammar it uses and you should progress easily, since you seem to have a sufficient although limited vocabulary already.

>>32490397
>Awakening with a gasp, an alien astronaut awakened
Too much awakening.

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>>32490465
Let's make the second a "regained consciousness" and pretend as if I have enough short-term memory to re-rewrite one sentence without spilling spaghetti.

It really isn't a fanfiction, but I've got a WIP article introducing newcomers to the mechanics of the games, and i've got more or less everything down short of abilities, evs, and ivs. Though I feel the writing might be a bit redundant.

Should I post a link?

>>32490716
>It really isn't a fanfiction
Probably not the right thread for it unless you're looking for someone with a trained eye to review your grammar and sentence structure since you mentioned redundancy. I'll give you some advice though, if you think something you've written sounds redundant you're usually better off deleting that part of it.

>>32490989
>if you think something you've written sounds redundant you're usually better off deleting that part of it
In fiction, redundancy is bad because it harms the pacing. In non-fiction, the reader usually skips things anyway so pacing isn't so important. Redundancy can help people understand things by presenting the same information in different ways.

>>32491066
Not against coming up with new examples to show the reader something, but that isn't what I think of when I hear the word redundant. Redundancy is the sort of stale variety of repetition or reiteration best avoided because redundancy says the same thing. A quick search on merriam-webster: an instance of needless repetition; the part of a message that can be eliminated without loss of essential information.

>>32491268
I associate "redundancy" most with the third wiktionary definition: "Duplication of parts of a message to guard against transmission errors." Writing is a lossy data transmission channel from author to reader, and sometimes you don't want to lose any.

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>>32491066
>>32491268
>>32491344
Allow me to post the part I'm talking about.

>>32491371
Disclaimer: I have never actually played a Pokemon game.

>Accuracy stat of all of a Pokemon's moves
Do the moves themselves actually have stats? I thought they all had fixed accuracy, and it was only modified by the Pokemon's stats.

>"attacks with low accuracy used against the Pokemon will be more likely to hit"
This risks people thinking it's specific to low accuracy attacks.

>>32491371
>Accuracy ties to the Accuracy stat.
While this might seem redundant, it's not on account of the fact that you are relating the in-game term to a statistical value. You don't need a synonym for "Accuracy" because you spell it out right after as "chance to hit".
I think it's fine personally, the rest makes sense too. Don't crits also negate opponent's defense buffs or am I imagining things?

>>32491409
>Do the moves themselves actually have stats? I thought they all had fixed accuracy, and it was only modified by the Pokemon's stats.
Most attacks are 100% unmodified, but a few have no accuracy stat (they always hit unless another effect rules that out), and some have very low accuracy to offset high power, such as the 70% elemental attacks and the 30% (later, variable) one-hit-knock-out moves.

Tell you what, posting the link. But please keep comments on this thread.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i6kt7ed4Rm2jbAGmC0LL4FKLcf34dTf7ruG3IJCHhV8/edit?usp=sharing

>>32491424
>Don't crits also negate opponent's defense buffs
They do. The guy writing the guide should add that.

>>32491447
To clarify, I always thought a "stat" in a game is something that can be modified. So if you talk about the "Accuracy stat of a move" that implies to me that you can do things like grind specific moves to make them more accurate. If it's just the "Accuracy of a move" then I wouldn't expect that to be possible.

>>32491457
Done. Thanks.

>>32491457
"Negate" implies that the defense stages are removes or reversed; they are not. A crit's damage is calculated, ignoring defense buffs.

>>32491469
More properly they are parameters, not statistics—statistics are measurements that are used to estimate uncertain parameters—but the term "stat" is typical jargon.

Morning

>>32472908
Sweet Jesus that hex manaic fic hit me in all the spots

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>>32472908
>Trainer fucks a lil messy thicc hex maniac NSFW
>https://archiveofourown.org/works/10831332

>you will never shitpost on Hexchan with a cutie hex maniac

"Last edit was made 10 days ago by RaggedyMimiga"

wow mimiga you've gone back to google drive editing and you didn't even say anthing

Hi, I'm requesting a story about an near god, entity that is talking to another powerful entity, preferably with a Q. About his bizarre adventures in the Pokemon world messing the characters from several regions only for fun, without any desire to harm them.

>>32496019
I borrowed a shitty computer and was finally able to upload that last fucking chapter that's been sitting in there for ages. I haven't started doing digital again because there's too much shit going on, I've gotta Frillish request to step up and do, and I decided to run through the rest of the rough draft before starting again.

I'm on the rough's epilogue, though, so it shouldn't be more an two or so weeks until shit picks back up.

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>>32496674
it's you again, isn't it

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>>32496674
>near god entity
>another powerful entity, preferably a Q
>bizarre adventures in several regions
STTNGOTP4EVR (it's canon too)

>>32472842
not really fanfiction stuff, but I need some help for an idea: in an RP I'm in, a young couple plan to take the Alola Trials together (set roughly a year since Sun and Moon's canon events), so I was thinking the island trials and the totems they face might be different, even if it's the same typings and captains still.

Any suggestions or ideas for trials for two?

>>32496859
Totems are already double battles; maybe just make the partner the totem calls also totem-tier?

aaa

>>32498032
What does this mean, gentlemen? Is he trying to communicate with us, or has he transcended into doggodom?

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>>32498360

>>32498360
A bit of internal screaming escaped his mind

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>>32498032

>>32498360
He buys Triple A games, but pirates indie games. That monster.

Good early morning from fuck

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Guys I had a dream last night, figured I'd share with you

>During the final battle with the mum
>Be Chicken butt, using Primarina
>About to use Oceanic Operetta
>Primarina raises her fins
>"GEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET"
>I begin to panic, Gladion is net to me for some reason, he looks really confused
>I raise my hands
>"REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEKT"
>Total annihilation, wipes the last pokemon
>"OH MY GOD SHE DID IT SHE FINALLY DID IT"
>Begin to shake Gladion, he's fearful now, doesn't know how to react
>"DO YOU KNOW HOW LONG I'VE BEEN TEACHING HER THIS?"
>He shakes his head, Primarina is now net to me, begging for some Poke Beans
>I'm unbelievably happy

What the hell? Has anyone had dreams about story ideas they've thought of? Or am I the only one?

>>32500247
>Has anyone had dreams about story ideas they've thought of?
One's what caused me to have a go at writing.

>>32500247
I think about my scrapped ideas a lot of that counts

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So what would happen if you posted a new chapter every day?

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>>32501323
I'd be impressed by my sudden burst of activity.

But,
>tfw scaled, my graph doesn't even reach a guideline.
I'm 0.778 orders of magnitude beneath having a valid comment on what you could experience.

>>32501323
I'd burn myself out for certain. Managing to post something every thread is what I'm comfortable with.

>>32501323
You generally stick in the minds of those reading or vaguely interested, but you also run the risk of burning out if you didn't write them all out ahead of time.

>>32500247
>Has anyone had dreams about story ideas they've thought of?
I've had dreams I've turned into elements of stories or worldbuilding, but rarely as-is. I see dreams as a valuable, but untrustworthy, source of inspiration.

>>32501323
My writing would be shit. I can't manage ~5k words a night and still have time to send them to betas and recieve feedbck then edit

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https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9011176/1/Just-Friends

In this story a mismatched 'couple' tries to find common ground, but doesn't really succeed at first. NSFW.

I had always intended to this story as a response to fapfics which were popular at the time in which a pokemon got handsy and a reluctant trainer ended up enjoying it anyway.
Last time I pussied out of it at the last minute and only uploaded a shorter, sweeter version, but now I've dug it out of the freezer and updated it - Please enjoy this reheated, revamped and remastered version with a revised second chapter and some slightly less tasteful content than last time, but more words.

Like last time, I do plan to continue it further. Look forward to it probably some time next year, or later maybe. I technically missed my deadline with this one but who's counting

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>>32501669
I've let several months pass between updates, if I dump everything at once people won't even realize the story is over.

Maybe I'll take it slow at first, and then fast. End it all with a bang.

>>32502262
>1280 visitors in one month.
Never again will I need Carl Sagan's "Pale Blue Dot" clip to feel insignificant.

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>>32502299
Fret not, anon, you're in a good spot right now.

The higher up you go, the easier it is to see just how insignificant we truly are. It's why so many rockstars commit sudoku. They've reached the pinnacle of what society sees as success and have even less meaning in their lives than average joe working at the corner store does.

>>32502362
>It's why so many rockstars commit sudoku.
I thought it was a consequence of the drugs.

>>32502362
2deep4me

>>32502262
Why are you looking at October of 2013 tho

>>32502194
Wait there's more than one chapter?

>>32502504
Most frequent releases. 7k weekly for two, three months. The story was really damn good back then, I love the post-No Man's Land chapters. I was on fire back then.

>>32502194
I approve.
—
* A few typos early, "dialogue ending lines with commas,"
* Unfired Chekhov's gun: Dialogue establishes that Rynn avoiding harming Anon is equated with Anon not using a pokéball on Rynn. When Rynn breaches that trust, there is no reciprocation. I'll assume that you're saving it for Chapter 4, when it's time for Anon to establish new boundaries in their relationship. Another angle would've been use of the ball to restrain her till she got over her condition, which could apply iff in your canon biological time passes normally for an encapsulated pokemon.
* Chapter 1 establishes that she can assume human glamour, yet curiously she didn't use that as a way to demonstrate against Anon's position on their physical difference. With only a comment that she can "be" anything, I think it was under-explored. Were I writing for this, I would've considered exploiting the on-the-couch shot, with her subtly first, then blatantly, using women seen while channel surfing as references, testing forms that might appeal to him—especially since he's gf-less—before snapping from frustration and exhaustion of licorice and forcing herself upon him.
* I feel lonesome, since everybody else seems to pick either laissez faire or la terreur when handling Harkness tests, while I've gone with a sliding scale of taboo, akin to interracial relationships in the 18th–20th centuries. I point this out as every time it's la terreur, I see the trainer flatten with every spout of, "But, teh law!" when his pokemon presses the matter: They never seem to teach/train their pokemon about why such a law is, and shall be obeyed. You went far enough to cite two liberal regions but didn't bring that matter into play. Again, saving it for later?
* A narrow scope of these two chapters (3 is really 2½, plot-wise) makes their motivations—how they got to Here—unclear. I think the omitted seasons had value.

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>>32500247
I've had the same dream (more like daydream) for the past 7 years. It's the reason why i got into writing/drawing and it's the only reason i got into writing fics so that i can have some resemblance to good writing and i don't fuck it up when the time comes to put it down on paper.

>>32501323
I probably wouldn't be posting here because i would be a 5th dimensional being with powers beyond human capabilities
who the fuck am i kidding though i would be posting here

>>32500247
I've been inspired by dreams enough to write entire sagas based on their premise.
>>32501323
It would mean 30k words a day, plus revisions to cut that down to a publish-worthy third.
In other words, it would be extremely painful.
For me_

>>32502194
I was just about to comment about having to wait another year for that fanfic to update.

Thank you!

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Reposting my "Pokemon for Newbies" article

please check it out: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i6kt7ed4Rm2jbAGmC0LL4FKLcf34dTf7ruG3IJCHhV8/edit?usp=sharing

>>32504309
You should select a style regarding em-dashes; this is neither spaceless nor spaced but with a space on one side (sometimes, the other side).

>the Pokemon always has a chance to escape the Pokeball
Master Ball.

>>32504309
(your anti-copy script doesn't stop me)
>defeats increasingly difficult opponents
Risks the reader assuming EXP isn't earned from weaker opponents

>appearance goes through a drastic transformation
Or minor transformation depending on the Pokemon

>However, some species of Pokemon do not evolve simply by leveling up
Implies all Pokemon evolve

>Luckily, however,
Do you need both?

>If a Pokemon's Accuracy stat increases, the more likely moves will hit their target
the more likely *their* moves, not moves in general

>>32500247
I had a dream that I watched a scary movie with a Musharna, it hogged all the popcorn

>>32504576
>>32504599
Thanks for the help.

but
>Implies all Pokemon evolve
I got it written that Pokemon
> " *may* experience what is called an “evolution.”"
Doesn't that imply that not all pokemon evolve?

>>32504826
>Doesn't that imply that not all pokemon evolve?
No, because the "may" could apply to the "If a Pokemon's level is high enough". And then you go on to list other causes of evolution, which makes this interpretation seem likely.

>>32504868
alright, added something to the end of the section, but it looks kind of abrupt. any suggestions?

>>32504905
"Some Pokemon do not evolve at all."

>>32504929
Or better "species of Pokemon", because Pokemon is ambiguous between species and individual.

>>32504309
>Pokemon
First thing I noticed is that to be honest. Here, have an é so you can write Pokémon and other Pokéterms.

>é

Most of the stuff I would notice is likely already grabbed by most other people (the em dashes for example), so what I can offer is that.

>Additionally, there are three more statistics...
This one is wrongly indented compared to previous paragraphs, and is not properly split from the previous one (missing a blank line).

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Errant's Hearth, Chapter 4 is now live, featuring some new faces, briefly, but sadly not a Haxorus attempting to create pottery.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12140893/4/The-Errant-s-Hearth
http://archiveofourown.org/works/7991302/chapters/24168936

>>32502194

Another "sympathize with the rapist" story featuring Zoroark, I guess cge is in good company here.

>>32502194
Yet another fake-deep poképhilia story. First we get waffling based on the old trope of not understanding the spirit of the law (which is only ever worthwhile if the point is that the character learns to think about it eventually, which doesn't seem to be the direction this story is heading in). Even worse since there are at least two implied reasons why the law is the way it is - and neither is as much as acknowledged, let alone addressed and explored.
Then we get the usual fetish bullshit routine anyway, with the implication that any point you might have been going for is going to be turned into utter farce. At least cge had the decency to give his sympathy-for-the-rapist story a bad ending; yours looks like it doesn't want to go there.

>Write chapter
>5000 words

>Write next chapter
>2000 words

I hate when this happens. I can already see the reviews

>Short chapter but I liked it
>Can't wait for next week!

Please don't be angry, it's just a good place to end it

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Why cant i write a Pokémon story!

No matter how hard i try, i cant write a story that my brain will allow me to post.

Help me, for i have story's to post, but my brain is keeping them hostage.

>>32507098
If that is a good place to end it, fine. But "it" must not have much to say. For me, 2000 is right for an epilogue.

>>32507775
>i cant write a story that my brain will allow me to post.
You are your brain. You are choosing not to face the consequences of posting, likely because an outside influence has somehow convinced you that a few people laughing at your flaws for a brief moment outweighs an opportunity to learn from your mistakes and to gain experience toward permanent mastery of a skill.

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Are there good alternatives to pastebin for a fiction's draft? I would like to send a link for a friend to look over. However there's no text formatting as consequence italics for character thoughts do not show up. FFN has a beta system for uploaded documents but the person I'm sending it to doesn't have an account there. Ideally would like to have the post expire or have the ability to delet it. Any suggestions? Pls no google docs.

>gif unrelated unless anon is writing that story about Pokemon WW2

>>32509083
So, something like a formatted pastebin? Pastehtml and Copytaste are the most immediate ones I can think of, neither requires account creation to my knowledge.

I think ix.io allows formatting too, if it still exists.

Admittedly I'd love to see something to share online richtext with annotations. GDocs kills machines once you open more than two tabs.

>>32509197
Thanks, I will investigate those.
>Admittedly I'd love to see something to share online richtext with annotations. GDocs kills machines once you open more than two tabs.
Me too. I always assumed it was my shitty computer.

Requesting a story about team skull/Guzma's reactions to sun/moon's unflinching, unchanging face despite their best attempt at intimidating them.

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>>32509535
always thought that was weird. They put so much expression in characers like lillie and guzma, but the player looks mentally handicapped in most situations.

They're gonna make a decent poker player when they age.

>>32507083
>Yet another fake-deep poképhilia story.
I don't ask this to invalidate your comment, or critique the critique, but what would an actually-deep poképhilia story look like?

>>32510041
That's almost a trick question. In order to not be mere fetish material or pretentious nonsense (or worse, message fiction), a poképhilia story would first have to deal with all the issues introduced by interpreting Pokémon as fully sapient. Thus the real question is not so much how one should handle the primarily fetish-based hook, but how one should handle everything around it.

Considering even worksafe stories regularly fail in that regard (and usually for similar reasons too), I highly doubt anything NSFW will perform better anytime soon.

>>32510146
That'd make for quite a bit of world building won't it? Which is fine by me, but don't you run into a huge wall of "allow me to tell you everything you need to know before I show anything that actually matters to the plot"?

>>32510146
>a poképhilia story would first have to deal with all the issues introduced by interpreting Pokémon as fully sapient.
Putting aside, for a moment, my personal opinion that some - not all - of these apparent problems are only a result of projecting IRL morality scenarios on a world in which morality would have developed differently due to circumstance, what problems would those be?

It's something that interests me a lot, and I'm glad it gets a lot of play in the thread instead of just being ignored, but I rarely come across someone actually lining the problems up besides references to slavery (the pokeball dynamic part of which I plan on addressing in the story after the one I'm currently writing, in fact, so I can't say this line of questioning is all innocent curiosity)

And for those with opinions on the topic, consider this an open invitation to discuss!

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quick question. Thinking about starting a comic series starting in Johto then jumping around to different regions. But I want time to elapse. So, by the time the protagonist gets to say, Sinnoh, the gym leaders, elite four and even the landscapes could be slightly different. TLDR how long do you think it takes for the events of each game to happen?
Pic unrelated

>>32510265
A year doesn't sound too bad but that's just an arbitrary time frame that's easy to work with.

>>32510198
All of my thoughts on the subject are slowly being reflected in the world wherever I can drop hints and nuggets of information. It's a huge topic to work through though and on a fairly regular basis I'm introduced to questions and situations to think through that further flesh out how things work in one crazy region compared to more or less the rest of them.

But the reader really never sees that, they just get the end product and my assurance that I am indeed (trying) to make it all make sense. I hope. I never expected sapience to be so far-reaching a problem and such an enormous wrench in literally everything; which is a hilariously foolish thought to have ever had, in hindsight.

>>32510197
That's one of the reasons why no one seems to have managed to do it so far.

>>32510198
Human cultural differences are something that should be explored, not just assumed or handwaved. If people commonly behave in ways that would be utterly nonsensical or evil by IRL standards, then the story must provide context that justifies/explains their ways of thinking in-universe. That basically never happens, because the canon doesn't do that (and somehow people never seem to ask why the canon is the way it is).

Then there's the dual issue of 1. not making sapient Pokémon basically humans in weird costumes and 2. not making them convenience faeries that sort of act like characters but don't actually possess free will. I've seen some good efforts in making them feel laterally different from humanity in terms of intellect/culture, but that usually happens in PMD-based stories where you don't get the human/monster conflicts likely to arise from cultural differences between species.

A common anti-pattern is making Pokémon perfect servants who are supposedly as smart as humans but are perfectly content living as servants with little to no rights, even when that setup invariably turns out badly for them. It's a double dose of "different morality" with zero effort of trying to contextualize anything. (And that's before you get into interspecies romance territory.)

>>32510265
>TLDR how long do you think it takes for the events of each game to happen?

1.5 to 4 hours if you're speed running

I'd say a few months for most games, weeks to days for a couple, but you can easily push that forward to a year or more with vaguely good writing.

>>32510373
>>32510384
A year was my initial thought, think the anime said it took a year for Ash to get back to Viridian. But there are only around 40 basic in-game plot points. Even doubling up with stuff in between that's only 2-3 months. Do I scale the "world" up or scale the time down? If that makes sense?

>>32510406
There's a long running sex focused story that details a trip through Hoenn and it does a surprisingly good job of increasing the distance and time between places.

The trip from slateport to mauville or mauville through route 111 takes the characters days to weeks, some parts even longer.

>>32510437
I might be a touch prudish for it, but if it does the journey justice then i'm in, you remember what it's called?

>>32510582
it might be a bit in your face for the first chapter or two, but hang in there, the story is pretty great.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8931005/1/Emerald-Shades

>>32510373
>1. not making sapient Pokémon basically humans in weird costumes
I think, unless pokemon in my stories seem sufficiently alien, I might have constant trouble with this. If I don't get it yet I never will, because I'm not even sure how to frame the problem...

>>32510666
>I'm not even sure how to frame the problem

Step zero is to look into philosophy/religion, since if you want to craft an "alien" mindset that's supposed to be different from humanity, you first need to have some understanding of humanity itself. "Non-human but mentally equivalent to a human" is not something that exists in reality, so you need to start at the root: What makes the non-human's way of thinking fundamentally different from a human's? There are no easy answers, though canon does provide possible starting points.

>>32510666
The use of alien forms of thought and logic is a good starting point. Showing things like the nature of a Pokemon bleeding into it's actions - not bold or naive, but rather something that a maybe dex entry says they do, is also a neat way to show off this division. This is also contingent on just how many Pokemon have sapience in your world.

Not all of them do for my writings, so many end up acting rather mundanely. There's also the whole values and morality thing to consider but I've yet to seriously examine that, mostly because I haven't gotten there yet with one character, and another was bred/raised in captivity by humans, which has an impact on their concepts of morality.

Almost done with that Frillish thing, by the way. It's not that long, but I'd really like it completed so I can focus on TMoM again.

>>32511147
OR. Sounds good!

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Have there not been any stories of Tsareena dominating trainers or pokemon, whether consensual or not?
Most of those I've seen make her the sub and it kind of rubs me the wrong way.

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>>32511921
Tell me if you find any typos. The process of starting a new job really makes me feel like I have to trudge through fics. Especially while also writing an epilogue that shifts mood hard from the last chapter.

http://archiveofourown.org/works/10884126

Escrito en glorioso español...

https://pastebin.com/rGRazvyG

up now

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>>32472842

>Where do you prefer reading or writing your fic, on the computer? Mobile? In a busy setting?

Computer to both, and ideally in a quiet and secluded area. It's just easier to work with those conditions.

And it's a bit late, but new chapter's out:

FFN:
>https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11084689/52/Fledglings

AO3:
>http://archiveofourown.org/works/3465593/chapters/24178197

This wraps up the current "Episode" of chapters, with the next one currently targeting an end of May release.

>>32510146
>>32510348
>>32510373
>>32510755
>>32510763
I'd like to thank you all for the feedback, again. I don't really have the answer I wanted but it's a step closer. For those of you who might (maybe, if I'm lucky) read my stuff, I plan on going into how some of it works in my iteration of the setting in the story after the one I'm currently writing. BSTF established a few details on this score, but as side mentions or background details; this upcoming story will expand upon them. Hopefully I can do the concepts service, instead of just appearing as handwaves.

I am left wondering though, because these are two very different approaches, and I don't know what you all might be looking for. I think any 'real' solution has a mix, and mine does as well, but when you ask for stories to 'address' the issue, do you mean:
>establishing that there is conflict on that score, and illustrate in-story fallout over the particulars, possibly as a subplot through the primary focus of the work
or do you want
>stories that show how these problems have already been sidestepped, circumvented, maneuvered around, or otherwise put behind when the story begins
I wont tell you how much of what to expect in my pass at the issue, because that would give away some of the events at the end of what I'm currently writing, but I do want to know what the audience of these 'deep' pieces might bite at

>>32514346
Honestly I think using a mixture of both things that have been resolved and things that are still being explored and dealt with is the best solution - at least in my experience.

It's why the regions all are in different states with respect to the issues sapience carries: you get a spectrum of settings to use and this means you can explore the issue from a variety of stages and using a variety of approaches.

That said, if you don't want to have it be a sort of in-progress thing, you might be better off having already resolved the entire ordeal, unless you really like constantly thinking about points of contention that may arise as a result of the plot, which you may very well. It certainly doesn't leave you with a shortage of things to say.

>>32514346
BSTF seemed to most have kept its options open. The protagonist seemed to be a rare exception, not anywhere close to the rule.

>establishing that there is conflict on that score, and illustrate in-story fallout over the particulars, possibly as a subplot through the primary focus of the work
>stories that show how these problems have already been sidestepped, circumvented, maneuvered around, or otherwise put behind when the story begins
Eitehr approach can work if executed well, though neither is easy. From the many failures I've seen, the issue isn't whether the author chose war or peace, it's that they failed to actually think their choice through.

I wish you luck in your efforts. I'll likely be around to give feedback once you release it.

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This is going to give away a bit of my next chapter but fuck it.
how do you suppose i should write groudon in the sense of an overwhelming foe. The main character, a grovyle, has to go up against one. I'm having a bit of trouble deciding how big i should make the legendary. Because its a choice between the equivalent of David and Goliath or David and Lucifer.

>>32514709
Don't just focus on size. Groudon has sunny day as an ability. Said ability can be used to describe the tension in the air, with Grovyle, despite being a grass type, still feels like the sun is burning away at his skin. There's also the pressure that a normal mon is challenging a fucking legendary, so he would also be fighting his instinct to run away from Groudon, or surrender and hope that his punishment for 'arrogance' would be more lenient. I haven't read your story, but just a few ideas to get things going.

tldr grass types like sunny days, but Groudon makes him sweat (or even make him wish he could sweat to cool off) like no tomorrow

Bump for "Oh god I made so many errors last night"
Remember to thank your proofers and beta-readers, for they are the greatest friends a writer could have

Well I'm supposed to be a stupid shitposter without any kind of talent. So what a heck I can do to improve this horrible situation. I'm feeling upset with myself.

>>32517428
U fockin wot m8

>>32517428
Talent is overrated. Read Garner's Modern English Usage from cover to cover and you're already better off than the average fanfic writer. Any idiot with the patience to scrutinize each sentence can reach basic competence. You're not working on great literature here.

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>>32517428
One word: Practice.

>>32517428
Reading is the most important part of writing. If you want to write fanfics, read fanfics and fiction. Go through the catalogue, ask for recommendations here for different subjects, as long as you get reading.

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Has /vpwt/ ever produced non-porn?

>>32517699
I think by total wordcount most of our stuff is SFW. Shorter stories are more likely to be smut, longer stories are more likely to be clean.

>>32517699
see >>32472908 and look for things labeled SFW. In addition, see https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1PtN4D_9CSw8JJ9uO6v0oQqdtKEkS8aFAvfxqI96XfSE/edit#gid=1942583087 for SFW stuff submitted into the catalog

>>32517699
I produce like 4 words for every nsfw word, and over half of those words are a single fic.

>>32517428
Accept that you're garbage and then start garbage fires and whine about it on the thread

>>32517699
>>32517728
oh uh, assume the multichapter stories are SFW as well

>>32517428
Assuming you're that demigod fanatic guy, you should focus on refining your english so that it makes sense to the average viewer. A story needs to be readable/presentable before you can receive proper advice.

Afterwards, I suggest going for much simpler plots for a story. Instead of trying to have whoever interact with normal characters, try a story in the universe of poemon rather than going all out into weird dimensional bullshit.

Up

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>>32517754
Well I must capitulate. Instead I will took the way of the Marvel's character Watcher. He only records on his mind all the happenings of the Sol System. As it's interferences are rare. As a character is good. Ok?

>>32520676
No. No demigods. Just drop it; there's next to no way to make them work in-setting. If your story concept has the word or part-of-word 'god' in it then you need to rethink things

In fact, rethink things thusly; why is a character of such power necessary for your story?

>>32520707
Seriously. I don't know. Only for criticism purposes. Only as a Watcher. I don't know... an exiled member of that for ages has being rejected by all types of societies even for gods. And in the end it only watched because he thinks he is crap and doesn't deserve even the right to make changes in the universe despite his great power.

>>32520739
You're telling me a bunch of possible ideas for a character but not telling me why it is NECESSARY or why it's in your STORY.

Story. Necessity. Keep your answer to just those aspects and try again.

>>32520739
I really want to put a nihilist character to give an equilibrium to the world. As you can see the great numbers of Ships on Pokemon like Amour shipping or Eonshipping. I want a lonely character with not more company than an entity created by himself to serve... Like and Android.

>>32520759
I don't know I want to put desperate man to wake up the feelings of mercy... A travel to know why destiny cursed him with being unhappy for the eternity.

>>32520775
A poor inmortal that acts frivolous because he can't escape from the void of his existence. And the only thing that aspires is death.

>>32520775
>>32520760
None of this requires demigod powers. So strip the powers; build the character as normal. Normal people can be nihilists, unhappy, desperate, lonely, self-afflicted wanderers and exiles. In fact when a normal person is these things, they're compelling and (if well-written) demand sympathy. Making them strange semi-deities just makes them alien and foreign to there reader, and ultimately boring. Write the characters on the scale of the story you want to write. The emotions you seek to create aren't those of an epic conflict, they're of a personal, nature, internal conflict on the scale of a lone scared human being.

>>32520805
Ok thanks. Ah. And what's about a crossover of Pokemon and RE...

any good romance (sfw) fanfics with kissing

>>32520947
?

bump

Morning

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>>32512300
>Complete request and post it
>OR in thread not an hour
>Not a peep of feedback for two days

I'm pretty sure you can keep requestin if the one you got was garbage, man.

>>32524128
Sorry bud, got sidetracked by travelling all over the place at the last moment. I'll need to settle down to read it properly before I can give feedback.

>>32524198
Ooh okay. No problem.

>>32524128
>Mimiga accidentally asks for feedback when cge is checking /vpwt/ during lunch.

>The entire day, and every stress that came with it, all mounted on a single sigh.
And then what?
>At the edge of the breath Adam opened his eyes again to the shallows before him and looked on.
That's it?

>Just below his feet, the waning sun pierced right through the water's surface and revealed the vibrant colors of the sands below.
The sun is below his feet? Is he standing on the water like Jesus? How colorful is this sand?

>Shadows ruled the other three corners of the cove
"…WITH IRON FISTS!"

>though bluish light still sparkled up from the little sunlight that did filter down at this angle.
Wordy.

>Soon most of his clothes would join the backpack he had carelessly discarded in the ferns near the hidden entrance, until only trunks remained.
Setting establishment back-fill.

>A tired smile crept onto his face. There were no more bright lights, no more annoying sounds. No more anyone else. Just him, the place only he knew, and the gentle lapping of the waves.
This is good.

You're trying to communicate emotional state via something like stream of consciousness, but you're relying on the setting to do it through establishment.

>Off came Adam's shoes, so he could feel the moss and ferns guiding him to the water's edge. Then his backpack dropped away, and with it the stresses of the day he also left behind, dismissing them with a deep sigh. The waning daylight sliced through the water's surface, illuminating gentle wave crests and colorful sand beneath, welcoming him. Delayed only to cast off his clothing till he wore only a pair of trunks, he closed his eyes and stepped in, relaxing in the cool breezes that swept around the three corners of the cove now shrouded in shadow. Opening his eyes again to a gently orange, half-set sun, a smile crept onto his face…

When the setting embodies the sensation you want to communicate, let the character experience the setting.

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>>32524276
Nice, I'll fuck with it.

Seems like I'm still working on not being a purple piece of shit, though. I don't know why I want my writing to stand out so much in the process. Writing's writing.

>>32472842
Anybody written any lewd stories? Preferably about a Gardevoir loving her master.

>>32525104
>he thinks there's no Garde lewds
Catalog!

>>32525141
See the catalog in the OP for some >>32472842

>>32525168
Oops, meant to reply to >>32525104.
Doubly check the nsfw tab in said catalog

>>32525141
Gardevoir is pure and pristine and must be soiled and sullied by nobody

>>32517105
Thank you to my betareaders and also to my idea bouncers around here.

>>32520947
¿

>>32525223
Methinks Gardevour will be the one doing the soiling, if you catch my drift.

>CAPTCHA
>POLICE 200m
kek

>>32525328
>Gardevour will be the one doing the soiling
plz lets not remember those fan arts

>>32472842
I want to wrote an erotic story, do you guys prefer first person or third person?

>>32527527
>wrote
I meant to write "write", my spellchecker changed it.

>>32527527
Third person, preferably third person limited, which is almost first person with the pronouns changed anyway.

hey guys heres my fanfiction
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it was a dark and stormy night when i went to professor oaks for my first pokemon i had an umbrella but the wind was so fierce it pulled it away from me i was so fucking pissed at this shitty weather oak could tell when i came in that i wasnt gonna take no shit we went into the backroom past the baby tree and fire thing and he showed me his secret pokemon a castform he was borrowing it from the weather institute in honen so im like hell yeah gimmie that shit dawg and so i had a floating little cloud thing CASTFORM USE SUNNY DAY

and the sunlight was strong all day long

the next week i was having to attend an outdoor funeral which i didn't wanna go because it would be awkward so i just kept telling castform to use sandstorm and the funeral got delayed and eventually the coffin was buried in sand so its like i helped out right

my bud castform helped me out in all the ways and i helped ppl too eventually i taught him psychic terrain and he did some psychic stuff

>>32527594
Link the story to pastebin, don't dump on thread.
See the OP

>>32524128
>>32524224
Alright, got settled down in a small cabin.
OR. Story's setting feels like the kind that would be perfect for settling down for some rest and relaxation. I think Adam's interaction with the Frillish was pretty cute, with both of them discovering things about the other in the water. I liked the tentacle play and I think the NSFW bits are fine (though BJs aren't my go-to). A shame he didn't penetrate her though, since I think they are more or less the size of a human (or at least protrayed that way in the anime). I do like it though, even if it is shorter than expected. Thanks!

>>32527853
The thing is I wasn't really sure how jellyfish have the pusspuss, and coming from stuff like "It's Hip To FUCK Bees" where I studied the genitalia of moths and bees for an hour, I'm kind of partial to a chunky bit of realism. Glad you liked it, though!

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>>32527949
I haven't read it Mimiga, but based on what the OR said, there's a BJ which means you were accurate. Sort of.

I need someone that will help me with my fic...

>>32528470
You forgot to link to it.

>>32502194
The trainer is 100% in the right, backing his stance with logic and reason. The pokemon, on the other hand, acts with complete disregard to her “best friends” feelings and destroys all notion of trust and friendship by litterally raping him. Or at least that's what I thought would happen.
This story was on track to be really good until the trainer just fucking forgives her for raping him, because she decides, after the fact, that he was right all along. I expected more than this, like the trainer punishing/abandoning the pokemon (which was mentioned in the story) or maybe a Stockholm Syndrome setup. This just feels... forced and... wrong.

>visiting parents
>find old fanfiction from when i was in highschool
>actually pretty good and not even cringeworthy

Wish I had the balls to publish it back then

>>32529797
Do you have the balls to publish it now that you're an adult?

>>32529797
what did your parents find it, print it, put it on your dresser?

>>32528470
Because I need help with characters psyche.

Tsundere Roselia is so cute!

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>>32529797
>Write the worst possible, most awful fanfiction imaginable as a kid
>Only a handful of people even knew it existed in the first place
>One is a real life friend
>He still remembers

>>32531601
as if you don't know something shameful he did back then too

>>32531601
Gotta stay humble. I'm reminded every so often of the more than questionable nature of my hobbies by my discord buddies.

>>32510041
Actual romance instead of just smut and pandering. This is where 99% of fanfic writers fail, in my opinion.

>>32533112
>Actual romance
define please since you are authority on actualness

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>keep writing chapter
>chapter doesn't end
>it just keeps getting larger and larger, already beyond my usual limit
>still not done yet, proud as fuck but i know i'll have hell when i finally edit
what have i become?

>>32533481
How big?

>>32533495
12k, probably 15k by the end of it
not much compared to your fics, but its the largest piece of fiction I've written in my life.
I really am stuck here forever.

>>32533506
Your git gud is under way. Soon you'll end up making chapters 20k words long without even realizing it just because there's so much shit you can detail and add. Then you'll have to deal with the wonderful world of 'slicing off information you really like but doesn't actually add anything to the story at hand/fucks with the pacing'.

>>32533535
I'd say i can generally keep up with pacing. Usually before i even write a chapter, i already know what the summary of it would be. Most of the time i'm a few chapters ahead as well.
Best thing i have going for me is that with most stories i think up, i already know the ending to them. Which is apparently the hardest thing to create.

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>>32533162
Character depth? Communication? Emotion? Not just wildly giving into carnal desires because "reasons"? Shit man, just adding some loving communication between couples between intimacy would do miles of good more most fanfics out there. It gets really old, seeing loads of sex scenes where partners who are supposedly has their first go at the sideways tango just let there "instinct" take over and magically both finish at the same time and bathe in afterglow. Neither romance, nor smut works that way.

>>32533481
>what have i become?
A writer.

Midnight boop

Found a nice short story about a guy missing his days as a trainer:
https://m.fanfiction.net/s/12486220/1/It-Never-Really-Leaves

>>32530655
Still need a story about one

So. What's about a story about a trainer that start to discover some aspects in his life after meet via dream with a being that even member of a very advanced society is doomed to death within his race and his universe because it's filling with entropy. Something like: Help me save my race or at least hear my last words and be with me in my last moments.

>>32542279
I don't think that premise immediately has anything to do with pokemon

>>32542279
I challenge you to come up with a plausible, coherent concept for a story that has nothing to do with fucking higher-order entities whatsoever.

Start with ONLY what is shown in Pokemon canon, and see what you can come up with.

If it's "nothing," please go.

>>32542327
Ok. I think more in a story where the entity is only a mere spectator trying to solve his depression for being almost inmortal but also doomed to be death, so he is only trying to get a redemption for his arrogance by getting a quality time with inferior beings... Something that force himself to readjust his thought about existence. But In the other side it would be like if the trainer has a normal life even becomes a champion.

>>32542397
Ok. Like what happens if Brendan is in a amour/ love triangle with Latias and May. And don't refuse that is Canon in ORAS.

>>32542279
Let's scale it down buddy. There is a town and pokemon live in it. A trainer decides he's going to take his pokemon up a mountain to harvest some berries he needs.

There. No crazy gods, no super science, no fucking nothing. Just a Trainer dealing with shit getting in his way on his way up a mountain and doing stuff with his buddy as the two fight off angry pokemon that don't want them to take the berries.

>>32542407
STOP TRYING FOR FOR HIGH-CONCEPT FICTION YOU HAVEN'T SHOWN THE ABILITY TO HANDLE IT IN ANY CAPACITY.

>>32542427
Great! Now write that instead of this other demigod/Q nonsense

>>32542435
Oh good... Instead of that I'll put the crazy God in a cameo like Stan Lee (the god in some form is like me) but NOTHING MORE. PD: Also what's about a story of horror (not like the Mythos of course) more like Jack the Ripper or Poirot Stories. Even some zombies. IDK. But first I'll write some common stuff.

>>32542481
I said instead. In sense of put him (the god) like a principal.

>>32542481
>I'll put the crazy God in a cameo like Stan Lee (the god in some form is like me) but NOTHING MORE.
If it's cameo level it's unimportant and should be excised.
Why?
>the god in some form is like me
I see we have come to the hear tof the matter.

Writing stories about you is worse than not writing stories at all.

>>32542490
Oki. Only a normal story. I thing I must keep the god in his place.

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>>32542279
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0CLzeLsu00A

pic unrelated it's just a funny captcha

also I don't have the voice for this shit

>>32502194
Hey CB, good to see you around again. I actually think I preferred the nonlewd direction it was in before, just conceptually, as I kinda thought that was the point of your fic... but that's not really up to me to decide, is it? The new content is still great, and I thoroughly enjoyed rereading it; my only gripes with it now are down to personal preference. Looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that may be.

>>32542555
Oh my God. This even made my laugh.
PD: I'm hearing the Toreador (Carmen overture ) and Swan Lake Waltz.

>>32542540
>I thing I must keep the god in his place.
Please do. The god's place is "not in writing."

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What is going on in this thread I can't even figure it out

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>>32542661
Welcome to /vpwt/, enjoy your stay. It's just our daily dose of starcitizen-kun posting...things.

>>32542661
Everyone is sharing stories and story ideas and story requests and stories about story-ing and one anon is going off about a weird demigod OC Donut Steel self-insert whiel everyone else tells him what a stupid idea it is

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>>32524128
Mimiga, you write like Jim Theis. I've read a lot of your stuff, and I can safely say that you've gotten worse over time. Your cute stuff is really cute. Your lewd stuff is also pretty nice, and even your melodrama is tolerable to me (and I usually hate melodrama; you keep it engaging enough to hold my interest nonetheless).

When you write the way that you do, with so much extra fluff added to every other sentence, it's tiring - tiring to read, and no doubt it seems to me tiring for you to write. Give this a read through (as far as you can stomach, and then just a bit more) and perhaps reconsider your excessive use of adjectives and adverbs.
http://ansible.uk/misc/eyeargon.html

>>32542678
Yes. I'm a cool. But you don't have to say me that things. Better listen to Tchaikovsky...

>>32542692
Fool. I'm a stupid fool. Also doing some Math and Science stuff so maybe that's why I became obsessed with Godness.

>>32542682
I'm pretty sure I just haven't gotten better, and my editors are always to blame for things that actually turn out well. Prose has always been a huge fucking thorn in my side. I get where you're coming from, and I catch a great deal of the stuff that would make things even worse on my second time through. I didn't have a second time through with this jellyfish smut. I actually really wasn't feeling it the whole way to be really honest, once I wrote the final word I let myself be done and took the lazy way out. I just want striking imagery like I did in Ears again. It sucks.

At least this gives me an opportunity to improve on half of TMoM since it's mostly yet unwritten in digital. Which brings me to my next point: TMoM's rough is now fully complete in its entirety of roughly 487 notebook pages. New chapters soon.

I suppose a better question to ask and cause discussion would be "How the fuck do I lighten up with my prose?"

>>32543193

-ensure your noun/verb sentence structure is always consistent and logical
-read your sentences out loud and make sure they'd sound like someone a person would reasonably say in real life when describing a scene
-don't use frilly, over the top descriptive words simply because they sound more exotic

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>>32543193
Well generally speaking you should ask, "What do I need to say?" Say only what you need to say and [then] dress it up, and don't over do it. Adjectives are a matter of "how much does this detail really matter," as much as adverbs are. If you need to use them it's because it's important first, fluffy second.

There is little to be gained from explaining over the course of 4 or 5 sentences that someone is alone in their room - unless this isolation is intended to set a very important scene or soliloquy or something, a single sentence or two of exposition is more than enough to communicate, "Thomas was alone."

I'd recommend trying to barebones explain an entire section of prose - say only what is absolutely necessary to understand the sequence of events, basically one step above bullet points, and then compare that naked paragraph to one you already have written. What you're aiming for is somewhere in-between, leaning one way or the other depending on your actual style, which based off what experience I do have with your writing is invariably going to lean towards more flowery, especially if I compare it to the often spartan descriptions I lean towards.

>>32543193
Babby-tier beginner advice (that one of my writebros LOVES throwing around, half-ironically) would be to never let yourself use an adverb. Not something to adhere to forever, but might be good practice.

Anyone know any decent adventure-ish stories with slight romance elements between humans? Hopefully not featuring Ash. I'd prefer the player characters like Ethan, Lyra, Brenden, etc.

>>32543193
>"How the fuck do I lighten up with my prose?"
Stop worshiping lightning that you think you once caught in a bottle. Prose is a medium without value or quality beyond that of what it communicates.

Communicate an interesting experience and the imagery will strike on its own. Focus on what's striking and you'll get a purple mess.

I showed you this a couple of days ago by re-forging one of your paragraphs. Each sentence you wrote is clearly an attempt at writing a "striking imagery" moment, like sitting at a piano and banging out arbitrary chords hoping that one will make the audience rise to applaud you. Music isn't about expertly playing intervals in sequence, although that is what happens in a musical performance. My revision contains all of the details I fished out of your composition, but while your paragraph's purpose was "Present these details, each as Striking Imagery," mine's was "Show how Adam feels when he is able to visit the water." My sentences are:
#1 Tactile: How he feels the ground with his feet and why that sensation is distinct and desired.
#2 Melodramatic: How his action of shedding his backpack is symbolic of shedding his cares.
#3 Visual: What he sees around him and why that sensation is distinct and desired.
#4 Climatic: What he experiences as he transitions from Adam Yearning To Be There to Adam Being Here.
#5 Denouement: A soliloquy by proxy, wherein Adam describes his thoughts about how Being Here achieves his goal.

My paragraph is a five-act play on a tiny scale; with the usual parts present and acting out their roles. In your paragraph, roles aren't clear. Each sentence acts as though its subject (or object) is the star for one moment, then the spotlight jumps to the next "star". Lacking cohesion and common purpose, and suffering from awkward word choices ("mounted" on a sigh, pierced "right" through, shadows "ruled" corners, light "still" sparkled, that "did" filter), all that shows through is the purple.

>>32536818
Nice share, anon.

Hi guys quick question, I just resd HaremMon and was wandering what happened to the story?. I tried finding updates, but couldnt find any.

>>32543903
If it was on FFN it probably got deleted because some groups spam report nsfw fics on the site until they get nuked

>>32544186
Yea it got deleted, man that sucks it was getting good by chap 9. You guys know if the author will continue with the story?

>>32544245
I don't think it was ever posted here, so I have some doubt it will continue, nor would there be a chance to contact the author unless he shows himself

>>32544551
Damn what a shame, was reading it last night at work and got hooked. Thanks for the reply

>>32527949
Which fic was that for realism?

I guess jellyfish don't have that technically, what with them being mostly a giant mouth with tentacles to pull food into said mouth, unless you wanted to go the octopus route.

hi mike

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>>32542926
If i may, I know nothing about the situation with your editors; so i apologize if I'm dissing them or anything.
But if you think they're the cause of this, i don't think any of us would mind you taking the time to edit it yourself. I mean, the person who understands their story the strongest is the writer. Personally speaking, i don't really see the point in having more than one editor. People all see things differently, and more than one interpretation can fuck up a clear story. Once again no offence to them, to each their own.
After all, your story is the thing that got me back into writing again. Ears was the story that really resonated with me, and got me back into the swing of this. Almost a year later, I can say Ears is still a good story but with a few big flaws. Although i'm clearly not good at reviewing work (the others who have already given you advice are ten times better than me at it,) i can agree with alot of what they say. Your writing is great, and you do well at cutesy, romantic stuff, and your great at setting up a good premise. Its just I gotta go through a lot of filler first. I've already said i'm not good at giving good constructive criticism. But if i were to summarize my problem real quick, its this:
When i'm reading Ears, alot of the words i'm reading start to feel useless, and i start skipping a bit too quickly. it doesn't linger with me. its just there, and if i start skimming through it i'll know whats going on without having to read the whole thing. If you want a concise answer as to why i read the whole thing in one night compared to now where i just skim through it, i guess i just got really invested in what you wrote. And that's really good, your really good at making a good premise and sticking to it. Even with the filler you know how to make good pacing and got me hooked with that, and when you get to emotional shit you know how to handle that as well.

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>>32546896
fuck me i didn't realize i was writing a blog but here i go again.
I remember first time reading through ears, i got to the end where you had the whole 'aw gee she's dead dude' part, and you got me emotional for a while. And the ending made me smiling like a school girl. When i was done, i got that tingly feeling, like: "fuck i gotta write my own thing now!"
That's what your good at, you can tug at the heartstrings like a fucking guitar. You know how to make a good setting, a good setup for the characters as well, and you know how to make an emotional finale. I mean fuck, I took some notes from your story in making mine. Not much but enough to probably see a similarity or two. I don't know what or where, but i know i did.
Best i could tldr this is, that 70k word count for ears could just be 50k or even 40k. Alot of it is way too many adjectives and descriptions. I've only read ears fully, and 4 chapters of MoM. At the time you only had 4, so i don't know what to expect from it. At the time i just didnt have the motivation to keep myself updated on the story. I'm a shitposter at heart, i don't know how to describe this shit. I can barely summarize my stories without needing a paragraph's worth of text. But its the best i can do. Hell, your the kinda guy i could see having a coffee or a beer with, maybe even some of the story ideas i keep to myself. Its just your stories have fucking ADHD

>>32542678
I think he might genuinely have autism. Not even meme autism, but honest to god, real deal stuff.

I get the language barrier, but that can only account for so much.

Watch over the next few days as he posts another idea about space gods or whatever, showing a complete disregard for everything said to him.

I almost look forward to them.

>>32546896
>But if you think they're the cause of this, i don't think any of us would mind you taking the time to edit it yourself

I mean that they (usually just Vry, but they) make shit actually worthwhile, whereas I edit for a little over twice as long as I actually do the writing. You know, 478 pages of notebook paper for rough draft and all. It's likely in part that editing that fucks me, because I like final products that feel like the things I've written up to that point mattered.

TMoM is big. I ended up cutting a great deal in my rough and I believe that more words will follow that I don't want to use to make Panne's problems logical and sound so that people can maybe sorta relate. I still am hoping I can cut the fat and turn my obese writing into something else, but I'm always scared of making it a bland skeleton, you know? There's so much I want to accomplish so that my characters and plot feel like they matter, and that's the thing that climbs most of the word count. Compared to Ears, though, I've been told it doesn't live up as a sequel, and for the first half of the story that's actually digital, I tend to believe that.

>>32547297
I mean at the end of the day most people are goign to interpret what characters say and do in different ways. For a personal example, my story rn for example. The entire thing is first person, like a diary or autobiography by the character himself. So i do tend to have the character express himself in one way or another. (Have him explain what he was thinking during something, or what he thought of other people.) In most other fiction, that would be left up to the character's actions, but i felt that it would work in this situation. And for the most part it has. But i still try to keep certain things hidden, like how MC might think one way about a character, but they turn out to be different. Or just keep what others think hidden, or subtle. One thing i've definitely tried to do is have a form of subtle and not so subtle foreshadowing that people will pick up on when it's finally said and done. Sort of like an 'oh shit' moment. For your story, especially since it's third person, it would work well to have alot of the characters thoughts and actions be alot more subtle. Like the old saying, show not tell. Readers, as far as i know, get emotionally attached to characters by putting themselves in their shoes; so trying to force a character to be unique too much can damage that. Like for instance, when you had Val almost die in mom, the audience knows that Panne is going to be distraught. So to emphasis that you gotta have it show through her actions and speech, instead of describing how distraught she is.
Its like the gun over the mantlepiece, when you write the gun into the story it's going to be fired eventually. So when adding shit to a story you gotta make sure its going to be used later, otherwise its just useless information.

>>32547359
adding to that blog: One thing i do is read my chapters after i've finished them and uploaded them. I write a summary of what's happened and what are the most important details, so i can put emphasis on them later.

>>32547297
You know that thing they say about cooking Mimiga? You can always add but you can't take away? Trimming fat from your work is hard. You get too invested in what you've said because damn it, I've spent time saying it, was it really all for naught?

Don't be afraid to write a skeleton for your first draft. You'll get to add to it and make it whole and you evade the grueling process that is cutting your work to size at the same time. I have always found it way easier to say something and have it be too sparse and then add to it than to cut a thousand words down to just 500. Try it yourself and see how it works out for you.

>>32547359
My subtlety can be seen from a mile away, though. Most of the second half as I have it now depends on subtlety to convey that things are not the way that Panne thinks they are, but a reader would think otherwise because they aren't a doofy Braixen who gets distracted easily and caught up on stuff. Most of the difficulty I've had is making sure people actually care for Panne's side and doesn't think she's a loony cunt. I honestly don't believe most of the useless information I add is useless.


>>32547487
Too late my skeleton's already a fucking fleshed demon with horns and shit. That's what I've been doing for the past three months is finishing the rough draft demon. I'm almost concerned that trying to make a shitty second-rough with hardly any descriptors is going to turn out like it's the perfect chapter or something.

>>32547541
>'m almost concerned that trying to make a shitty second-rough with hardly any descriptors is going to turn out like it's the perfect chapter or something.
>I'm almost concerned
That doesn't sound like a cause for concern to me. That sounds like a "Fuck it, hold my [beverage of choice] moment."

>>32547541
The reader is always going to infer something from the story, so i dont think subtlety can be necessarily bad. Trying to pick up on subtlety and foreshadowing is one of the important parts of immersion.
>Most of the second half as I have it now depends on subtlety to convey that things are not the way that Panne thinks they are, but a reader would think otherwise because they aren't a doofy Braixen who gets distracted easily and caught up on stuff.
Go for it, i'd be fine with that subtlety. We're seeing the story from somewhat of Panne's side of the story. So someone who isn't that clever or bright would of course infer something incorrectly. I'd say it would add to the story.

>>32547563
I'd be concerned because I've been chugging along being a purple cunt for so long that I'd have to rebuild the entire way I write even harder than I would right now. I'm far too lazy to do that in a reasonable amount of time.

>>32547577
I hold the belief that there's a really fine line I'm walking where Panne is simply being too paranoid and that no sane reader would even have the flicker of a thought to agree with her-- especially if they've played GtI and knew who the fuck Hydreigon was. They'd just be like "wow this plot is garbage and not interesting because I am not Panne and already know that what she's so convinced is happening isn't going to happen." And it goes on for a good fucking while, too, so if someone got bored of it early then they would really be in for a treat when she just continually makes a complete fool of herself trying to posture and prepare.

>>32547649
nigga that's doubt. The character is experiencing doubt and that's fine. Hell, mine has the same thing except not as persistent. If the reader knows this it's just gonna help them identify with the character and get all excited over how she's going to process shit when it finally hits the fan.

>>32547649
>They'd just be like "wow this plot is garbage and not interesting because I am not Panne and already know that what she's so convinced is happening isn't going to happen."
Dramatic Irony has been a part of fiction since fiction was invented.

>>32547541
>>32547649
The thing about subtle hints is they're usually pretty small and you don't draw a lot of attention to them. At least that's what it's been in my experience. There are a lot of subtle hints in very short bursts throughout ACPC about character backstories, the villain, why things are happening, but they don't demand a great deal of explanation. Something could be made purposefully vague or not fully understood and what have you.

But anyway, less on that and more on the whole skeleton thing. Look, you've probably already got all this shit set so it's not like completely redoing the last bit of MoM is feasible, that said you should seriously consider telling your laziness to go fuck itself and learn to write more barebones. It'll save you a _lot_ of time and grief down the road and you won't be stuck with producing something that makes you think you've wasted your time on because people didn't care for it or because it was too purple.

Instead you get to worry about not being descriptive enough and shit like that, which is different, new and exciting!

>>32547838
Once I did the subtlety move and had a character completely give themselves away as the villain but used their presence and charisma to completely slide the fuck by the fact. I'm not sure if anyone's noticed it without me saying it on the thread, though, or if it was just too subtle to worry about even in knowing it. I haven't been able to recreate that kinda thing since.

Regardless, I'll try my best to make this next chapter a basic bitch. My only problem is that it's the midboss, and kind of requires a high intensity level of imagery to express the fuckening-- both in mind and body-- that is going to occur.

>>32547935
>and kind of requires a high intensity level of imagery to express the fuckening
If high-intensity shit is going to go down, basic imagery will turn out high-intensity on its own. Don't try to dress the scene up, especially if it doesn't already need the dressing.

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night

wow

What makes for a decent tragedy fic? Does anyone have any fics tagged in this area

>>32550403
>tragedy
Sympathetic character above everything. Even if they're responsible for their own downfall. The Sandman comic does this near flawlessly.

Hell, even if the character is the bad guy it can still work, just focus on character driving story, rather than the reverse.

Up

good one

>>32550403
Not a Pokémon fic, but I think I found a story worth a shot that portrays tragedy pretty well, if a bit simple.
https://m.fanfiction.net/s/10905422/1/I-ve-Got-Strings

In particular, Marisa and Meiling deal with a good chunk, both of whom sympathize with attacking an animal that just wanted to survive, and dealing with the subsequent consequence of their action by contributing to Adam's creation. Attempts to bond have been made, but they are still forced to take action against him from time to time.

For a Pokémon setting this could be recreated to an extent if scientists get involved, or even any trainer that shows sympathy for a wild Mon, with them encountering said Mon multiple times

>>32547096
Nope. I don't have autism, the problem is that I when I speak or write in English is difficult to get my ideas in a coherent order. That's all. And the demigod complex is because I became obsessed over Cthulhu Mythos some time, combine this with the hedonism that the almighty might cause and ta-da you got a weird character.

>>32551134
>the demigod complex is because I became obsessed over Cthulhu Mythos some time, combine this with the hedonism that the almighty might cause and ta-da you got a weird character.
Okay. I like your Lovecraft interests as well. But it's not relatable to Pokemon as a premise and if you lack the skill to convey these abstract mythos to the fandom in a coherent way it's just a hot mess.

>>32551134
Unless you want to write from the perspective of a legendary poke - and that is going to be a very hard sell and require skills beyond what you probably have - that's not a character concept for Pokemon

>>32551391
Oh. If only anyone could read Spanish my real strong point.

And that's the point. I'll do better if someone could rate my work in Spanish. Pero en este caótico y complejo mundo, donde el espacio y el tiempo convergen en una sola línea etérea, nuestro destino es irrelevante.

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>>32552161
there's plenty of people who write fics in spanish, just look at the recent uploads on FF.net and you'll have like 3/10 of them in spanish.
Fuckin metro was the best damn sci fi i ever read and that was translated from russian which is apparently a fuckin trash language for literature.
Might as well try it mate, at worst you'll just have another fic out of a thousand. At best you'll learn from the experience and get better at writing.
we're still going to shitpost about you though

>>32551391
To be fair, a fic about a bored Arceus trying out the whole 'trainer challenge' in a human disguise could make for a decent humor/parody fic if the player character accompanied him on his hijinks

>>32553114
I'd read it.

>>32553114
I want to see him struggle to capture a Weedle

Dead thread!

>>32554499
Dead dreams!

Less than 5 posts away from the bump limit and I finally find time to post here. Better late than never, I guess, but it sure makes for a very belated TOTT response. Speaking of which...

>>32472842
>TOTT
For both reading and writing, I primarily use my desktop. When writing, I prefer it to be mostly quiet, though I'll occasionally put on music or white/environmental noise to help myself write. But when it comes to reading, I like it to be as quiet as possible.
That said, I pretty much never read fics now, thanks to burnout from all the reading I'm assigned for classes. I also haven't been getting much writing done either, but I'm working on improving that, and I hope to finish the next chapter of my story over the weekend, if anyone cares.

>>32550436
>Even if they're responsible for their own downfall
Especially if they're responsible for their own downfall. After all, that's what defines a tragic hero (unless I'm mistaken).

>>32554637
You probably should involve the quantum physics trio doing memes. You know you can write real books instead of fanfiction, right?

>>32554637
Unless you intend to bore the audience with the goings on of the universe on a cosmic level as narrated by Arceus, you aren't going to find a way to really weave that into a fanfic if the previous ideas you've spouted are anything to go by. Stop going for "cosmic shit is happening" and trying to apply it to fanfiction. Even Hitchhiker's Guide was about people doing things and humorous shit happening with only the odd drop in of crazy science.

It's not going to work in the world of Pokemon without a Herculean effort that I don't think you can exert.

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>>32554637
>he's back

FUCKING STOP REEEEEEEEEEE

>>32554637
You are aware this is a POKEMON board, yes?

Perhaps you should take this stuff to a more generic writefag thread? I'm sure you'd get a lot more help.

>>32554637
>>>/lit/ is a better place for such writing if you're not going for Pokémon stuff

>tfw another thread hit bump limit before I could finish this piece of shit

I like spicychicken but writing cross-culture shenanigans is suffering.

too bad that describes the last two stories I wrote, this story, and the next one I'm going to write. I sense a trend

>>32555021
Then drop the shenanigans and upgrade to extra crispy. You know what your audience wants.

>>32555810
>drop your aspirations and write disposable smut instead

Trying to eliminate the competition, are we?

A chapter to post and we're page 10. Mixed feelings about this.

>>32556695
Wait for new thread.

Rest in piece good thread.

>>32556943
New thread. Would do recap, but see the theme