Ok, I'm a shitty writer, but I had an assignment to write a comedy short film. So here it is.
Please give it a read, and tear it to pieces. It has shitty jokes and virtually no talent behind it, but it might get shot in a couple of weeks, if I make it good enough.
Thanks transvesties
http://imgur.com/a/vYML6
>>82810152
got damn those titties
she's more plastic than woman now
>>82810182
Them lips tho
>>82810219
>>82810217
>not liking plastic bimbos
Totally unpatrician
>>82810323
I guess I fucked up with the OP pic.
>>82810323
she has a square ass now
don't test me
>>82810152
i liked the single roll of bills and trying not to offend the cheese jokes, but i feel like you could do with a few more jokes like that to really nail that 'silly' sort of mood, maybe make linguini and stefano more buffoonish, or have a little slapstick in there, like the cheese dealer struggling to get out of his car seat or something
good luck OP
hello is this the olympics waifu thread ;D
>>82810399
what a shitty body
>>82810653
Who's the girl on the left with the tits?
>>82810323
>(you)
>>82810754
ummm i dk
>>82810591
also you could have a bit of silliness in the restaurant scenes, like have the guy eating the food smack his lips really loudly, or nearly choke, or just eat really weirdly
>>82810591
Thanks for reading it my dude.
I will give that a try. Does the Vanesa Carlton thing comes across as too forced?
>>82810811
not this fucking faggot again
>>82810938
?
what do you mean by this?
>>82810902
>Vanesa Carlton
i have no idea who that is
>>82810323
Is a closseted faggots thing, they like bimbos one day, the next they fap to trans bimbofication
>>82811102
A singer, from making my way downton song