Choose your own A/d/venture

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>>10531203
Sample text

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>>10531203
Fuck off 4chan duplicate reply rules

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>>10531207

it is done, now you guys will have to pick up the posting from here.

>>10531209
Except it's already been established that these threads belong on /trash/. And this isn't a joke. If you go to /trash/ you will see CYOA threads alive and thriving. Posting CYOA threads in /d/ gets you banned now.

>>10531210
Really? Shit! I didn't know! Why?!

>>10531211
Because mods decided they are against nonexistent rules.

>>10531212
Well... Fuck.

>>10531212
Technically there are rules, but these rules weren't enforced for years, and then SUDDENLY after a new janitor recruitment they got enforced hard.

>>10531214
exactly what rule is it against?

>>10531214
Eh... depends on interpretation. There's nothing specific against them. And may of them are certainly hentai images presented in an alternative manner.

I just wanna jack off to weird shit. Is that so much to ask?

THE REBELLION WILL NOT DIE

>>10531215
"quality of posts" which is essentially a blanket rule for them to refer to when they feel like banning people for any reason. In any case the CYOA community got sick of dealing with this shit so they moved to /trash/ where they don't need to worry about being fingered by overzealous janitors and banned by lazy moderators who allow dozens of rule breaking threads and thousands of rule breaking posts to go unpunished.

>>10531218
so you are saying we did not actually break a rule, but (mostly) just don't care enough to fight the tyrant.
makes sense.

Hopefully this cancerous thread will be deleted from further tainting this board.

>>10531199
>>/trash/thread/10515954

>>10531221
>cancerous
lol ok

>>10531221
Damn, now I know how the Jews felt

>>10531218
Yeah, now they need to worry about surviving in /trash/. They can do that of course, by spamming rollposts, but that is horrible.

Previous thread: >>10515954
Desuarchive link: http://desuarchive.org/trash/thread/10515954

/cyoag/'s CYOA archives and related resources: https://pastebin.com/vrqYhnpu

>>10531199
Because you're supposed to use the abbreviation, retard. CYOA.

>>10531348
>Because you're supposed to use the abbreviation, retard. CYOA.
The thread was moved here from another board, presumably /d/.

>>10531434
Shame, should have been deleted outright. Hope the OP got a nice long ban.

>>10531348
This thread was posted on /d/ originally, by someone unaware of the nazimod who banned all text on /d/ because "image board only lol"

>>10531446
See >>10531441

>>10531441
What do you have against cyoas? Did a choose your own adventure story make you piss yourself as a kid or something?

>>10531441
Why are you still here?

>>10531462
There shouldn't be a lewd CYOA thread. All you do is steal /tg/ content, or else you make disgusting furshit CYOAs so you can fantasize about raping your pet dog.

>>10531471
Why does your shitty thread exist?

>>10531478
So because you don't like it you spend every day here complaining about it? That would be funny if it wasn't so sad.

>>10531489
Nah, all I do is make sure it stays here.

>>10531478
>or else you make disgusting furshit CYOAs so you can fantasize about raping your pet dog.

This is complete horseshit. Point out furry cyoas that were posted when these threads were on /d/ and not on /trash/ which is basically the furry board

Also the idea of Choose Your Own A/d/venture General only being able to steal /tg/ content is laughable considering there were numerous examples of oc from multiple creators and the fact that you can't post lewd shit on /tg/. Sure, some stuff is found on /tg/ and posted here, but that's pretty rare because these threads are for lewd cyoas, not normal ones.

>b-but the oc is all fur-shit
I've already said that that is objectively false, so why do you feel the need to shitpost, troll, and whine about a lewd cyoa thread when it has done literally nothing wrong. inb4 "lol it's so easy to make you guys mad"

>>10531593
>there were numerous examples of oc from multiple creators
You're going to mention Gol who also posts sfw versions, I bet.

>>10531593
Also you can post all the lewd shit you want on /tg/, just don't have any nudity. So hard!

>>10531611
Who only posts safe for work versions on /tg/ because /d/ took cyoa threads down and he needed to retain an audience for lewd cyoas

>>10531614
>you can post all the lewd shit you want on /tg/, just don't have any nudity
Because no nudity isn't a big restriction when making cyoas with for the purpose of being able to fap to it as well as create a build.

>>10531654
You sure are retarded, he's always made SFW versions

You're also a fucking retarded caveman if a nipple gets you instantly hard whereas good descriptions and details can't.

>>10531663
I'm pretty sure the retarded one here is you anon, he explicitly stated he created sfw versions to post on /tg/ because /d/ took them down. And yeah, why would anyone want to look at porn in a cyoa designed to arouse. Why do people even look at porn? Don't they know they can just read erotic literature and fap? You've also failed to state why cyoas with porn images are a problem, if you're fine with Gol's posts on /tg/ when the porn is censored, why do you have a problem with cyoas with uncensored porn being on /d/?

Can someone post the Eronimicon please?

Just ignore the rabid-SFW-anon.

>>10531701
It's not my fault you don't go to /tg/ and don't realize he's always made sfw versions, even when your trash thread was around. Dumbfuck.

>Why they're a problem
Your alternate versions don't justify stealing /tg/ content to keep your garbage bumped.

>>10531720
>He thinks posting content from one board on another board is "stealing"
Are you some kind of /tg/ elitist? And you know there's also nsfw cyoas with no alternate sfw version right? And I do go to /tg/, I've been going there long before /d/ stopped allowing cyoa threads in fact, and I never once saw a sfw Tokhaar cyoa until /d/ shut down these threads there.

So if your only argument for why they shouldn't be allowed anywhere except /trash/ is because they "steal" from /tg/ sometimes then you're possibly the most autistic individual on 4chan, I think you deserve some kind of prize. Most of /tg/ was pretty upset when lewd cyoas were banned from /d/, so I don't understand your logic.

>>10531787
If all you really do is post /tg/ content, then you're a waste of space. You're just too retardedly stubborn to admit it.

>And you know there's also nsfw cyoas with no alternate sfw version right?
Oh no, your furry CYOAs and futa pick ones can't be reposted! So much lost content!

>I do go to /tg/
Wanna know how I know you're lying?

>Most of /tg/
You and your two friends whining in the /tg/ thread do not constitute most of the entire fucking board, moron.

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>>10531787
Dude. >>10531714
He's been a tard for a long time, even (or especially) back when the /d/ threads were just starting to gain some manner of foothold.

>>10531814
And now you're stuck in /trash/ with the sonic and pony porn generals. Fallen so far, eh?

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>>10531860
Page 2/3.

>>10531807
>You and your two friends
Lol ok anon, we're just gonna pretend like a bunch of anons and creators like Tokhaar and ZBG didn't care that /d/ wouldn't allow cyoa threads anymore

>Again with the furry bullshit
I've already said that there were no furry cyoas posted in these threads on /d/, I don't know why you keep bringing this up.

>All you do is post /tg/ content
Nigger, the shit from /tg/ was an occasional bump, don't suck /tg/'s dick too hard. The rest was nsfw OC, and no, Tokhaar didn't post sfw versions on /tg/ when the /d/ threads were up. And even if he did, the original content was still meant for /d/, the sfw versions are just white boxes covering everything nsfw.

>>10531814
I know he's probably just a troll trying to bait, but it's cathartic seeing the bullshit arguments he makes trying to defend his position.

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>>10531868
Page 3/3. (let's hope it doesn't get stuck at 99% this time...)

>>10531888
>Bunch of creators
>Tok and someone who doesn't even post here

>There were no furry CYOAs
That hypno one with western furry art and the start wars one beg to differ, and that's just off the top of my head.

>An occasional bump
Try 95% of your posts. It still is, even on trash when you can spam like the fagot you are.

>>10531860
One day I'll figure out photoshop and post my edits.

>>10531971
I mentioned them as examples anon, do you expect me to name every creator who cared about the /d/ thing? And what does ZBG not posting here have to do with anything? Have you ever heard of lurking? He made it clear he thought it was a shame cyoa threads were banned from /d/.

>Furry examples
Nice try dude, both of the cyoas you mentioned having "furry shit" were not only originally from /tg/ (because there were no nsfw images in either of them) but the furry content was extremely tame, it was like a cat girl and wookies, like come the fuck on.

>95% of your posts
lol ok, that's just untrue but whatever.

Still though, why do you care so much? Why do you care if lewder /tg/ content and nsfw content are posted together in a thread on /d/? Because /tg/ owns cyoas? Anyway, I'm tired so I'm gonna go to sleep, I'm done shitting up the thread arguing with somebody who has no valid points or reasons for why there shouldn't be lewd cyoa threads on /d/.

>>10532068
>Do you expect me to name every creator
Your entire argument is that literally every single poster in all of /tg/ cared, so yes.

>Star Wars CYOA specifically mentions /d/
>Hurr it was from /tg/
Either you're a moron or you're thinking of the wrong one, since the one I'm talking about has lots of porn. You also go on to defend furries, so you're clearly a dogfucker.

>Why do you care?
Parasites don't deserve to live.

>>10532081
Wow, came to check if your arguments got more cancerous and they did. It was pretty easy to guess before, but now it's just obvious you're a troll, so I'm going to bed.

>>10532133
>Dogfucker doesn't have a counter

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>Gol is posting on /tg/ saying our criticism isn't valid because Reddit disagrees.

>>10532299
He has a point with what he meant. but the way he said it was pretty fucking retarded.

>>10532348
I don't think bringing up reddit builds is ever a good point. Not in any subject or any debate.

I also cannot stand the way he ignores specific suggestions/complaints to make a general dismissive post to everyone and everything later on.

>>10532367
I mean, Gol usually makes extra content with his cyoas right? All people want is more fetishes as powers, the cost of boons to be lowered just so that it's possible to get more than a couple, and more drawbacks so that your options are less limited. It sounds like a lot, but considering Gol usually adds more pages full of content after finishing a cyoa, I don't see why he can't try and fix some issues that people see with the cyoa.

>>10532436
He's said point blank over and over he thinks making another page is stupid and doesn't want to do it, his enthusiasm seems to be low from the start on this CYOA.

>>10532454
Huh, well I guess it's pointless to keep trying then. If he doesn't wanna work on the cyoa anymore there isn't much we can do.

>>10532454
>He's said point blank over and over he thinks making another page is stupid and doesn't want to do it
IIRC he mentioned in another post that he'd consider making another page, but mentioned that he's apprehensive about it due to the whole hassle of needing to go search for more images.

>>10532555
Everyone should have a 200,000 image archive like me.

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>>10532568
This, it's necessary to have hundreds of images of cute girls with different reactions and fetishes.
Both for creative work and in general.

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>>10532299
>must be bullshit
>go check
>it's true
I thought he would at least have the common sense to not publicly value reddits opinion over 4chans on 4chan.

>>10532688
I think he maybe should've had his coffee before coming to post.

>>10532348
>Reddit thinks it's fine so everyone's complaints are invalid, except the ones that can be changed within a few seconds like minor typos.

Both what he said and what he meant were really fucking retarded.

Guys, looks like TokHaar's considering changing how corruptions work: >>>/tg/54404460

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>>10533059
Since Tok's gonna do a rehaul I may as well post this for him since it may soon become irrelevant.
Just description and minor spell effect changes, and moving around the Grow and Shrink spells.

It's understandable why TokHaar is reluctant to make too many changes to the cyoa once finished, It's a very tedious and exhausting job and he needs to reserve all that energy to fap to the builds.

Only P1 Edit, Tok can do the rest, I'n not a huge fan of the Pink, Purple, Blue and Black Eromancies.

>>10531220
Domain: Darkness from Beyond the Stars
Body: Amorph (18), Wings (36)
Sustenance: People (42), Madness (54)
Powers: Visage (60), Mind (72), Memes (96), Shadows (108), Element - Space (144)

You ever have that feeling, when you're walking alone, that someone's watching you? That's me. You ever feel like someone's behind you when you're sitting at your computer at night? So close they can grab you? Also me. You ever have a friend who just suddenly went missing one day, who you never heard from again? That was me too.

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>>10533324
>You ever have a friend who just suddenly went missing one day, who you never heard from again? That was me too.
The friend, the reason the friend went missing, or both?

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>>10531207

This, er... Got a bit out of control.

Wrote a 1.5K word story to go along with my build.

https://www.reddit.com/r/nsfwcyoa/comments/6a379d/mindslaver_v11_by_tokhaar_gol/dkfgn2y/

>>10533139
Is there any more?

>>10531199
Put "CYOA" in the title next time, you dickface.

>>10533449
>Is there any more?
>>10533139
>Only P1 Edit, Tok can do the rest, I'n not a huge fan of the Pink, Purple, Blue and Black Eromancies.

>>10533451
The thread was moved here from elsewhere.

>>10533139
>Since Tok's gonna do a rehaul
no rehaul said I would do a update, I intended a small update.
>It's understandable why TokHaar is reluctant to make too many changes to the cyoa once finished, It's a very tedious and exhausting job and he needs to reserve all that energy to fap to the builds.
Yes, and I work in MS Paint. Also any time I spend on editing this, is time I could spend relaxing and preparing for my next CYOA.

Are there any good CYOA's set in the MGE verse? Ideally as an Incubus Lord?

>>10533523
>Also any time I spend on editing this, is time I could spend relaxing and preparing for my next CYOA.
Why not just spend alot of time improving perfecting this cyoa before posting, instead of hastily pushing it out just to make way for more hurried stuff? Probably would have gotten a better reception if you had spend alittle more time with it desu.

>>10533550
Yep. I'd rather have one good, polished CYOA over two rush jobs. I don't get why he isn't more open to critique.

>>10533550
>Eronomicon was hurried and rushed.
TokHaar here, No, it was not more hurried then any other CYOA I have made. I spend 3 days polishing it. I think some people diden't like it, because there was a lot of hype around it and a lot of the problems people have with it are problems I said would be unavoidable in the Eronomicon when I said I was not going to make it and I did Deus Vult instead. But later people voted for Eronomicon to be made in a strawpool I created and then I make Eronomicon. The lesson of the story is to not listen to what people want you to make, its to make things that people didn't know they wanted.

>>10533605
So what are you going to make next?

>>10533605
I didn't know I wanted Eronomicon Tb h, And while I'm pleasantly surprised by it, I'm also a little saddened it feels a little minimal and not as good as it could be.

>>10533605
>accused of not listening to people
>claims his problem was listening to people
>vows to stop listening to people
You can't make shit like that up. Dude, I didn't know shit about the Eronomicon so the hype explanation doesn't really fly.

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>>10533704
TokHaar here, it feels small because there are 7 schools and I need to create content which is unique to each school and to make every school big would require tons of work and then I would end up with a 8 page CYOA which no one would rpost becouse its too long and people don't like too long CYOAs and most people will not play 3+ page CYOAs. This was a problem which was unavoidable from the start.

>>10533651
Haven't decided yet, stands between "We Wuz Deviants" (egyptian themed fantasy adventure), "Dungeons and Deviants" (lewd RPG world with Sussie as game master), "Eldritch Gifts 2: The Re-vengence" and other less developed ideas I have.

>>10533763
And what about the other explanation anon?
>a lot of the problems people have with it are problems I said would be unavoidable in the Eronomicon when I said I was not going to make it and I did Deus Vult instead.

>>10533806
Make what you want to make man, it doesn't matter if people don't have the patience to read seven pages of content you will get some dedicated fans that love that stuff, I mean slut life is one of the most well known and liked /d/ cyoa out there and it has a shit load of pages.

>>10533806
>"Eldritch Gifts 2: The Re-vengence"
Would this let you turn the tables on the drawbacks from the previous gifts (e.g. picked shapeshifting and became a shoggoth slave? Now you get to enslave your former master etc.), or would it be just another bunch similar to the first batch?

>>10533806
>Tfw I'd play an 8 page souped up version of eronomicon
>Tfw you could have gotten an 8 Page eronomicon if only authors weren't soo obsessed with their work being reposted.
>Tfw I have to make my own 8 page eronomicon, with blackjack and hookers.

>>10533875
>Make what you want to make man
I intend to do that, no more polls on what I should make
>7 pages, slut life and...
I just get exhausted by the very idea, finding images for 7 pages..... I like my 3 page format which Enlaved, Mindlsaver, Deus Vult and Infected have and I will keep my CYOAs 1-4 pages, more often 3 pages.

>>10533889
>"Eldritch Gifts 2: The Re-vengence"
>What's it all about? Is it option A or Option B
Option C anon, something entirely different!

>>10531205
Do you need to do any missions or associate yourself at all with the religious people? Can you just do your own thing?

>>10533806
Nigger, 8 pages is nothing. There was like 2-3 months where all people would talk about in /tg/ was some 50 page all text abomination of a cyoa where you became a demon and had to plot how you were going to overthrow the angels/sabotage the coalitions of demons/join Not!Lucifer in his quest to rule the multiverse.

Worst case scenario, you'd have to PDF it up to get it reposted frequently, and phoneposters would bitch for a day or so.

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>>10531207
>>10531208
TokHaar here, anon that is not the latest version... Here is the latest version.

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>>10533959
Suit yourself, not everyone likes making more than 3 page cyoa since the amount of work you have to put in if you want to make it good is daunting.
If you like your formula stick with but if you think that you might be biting more than you can chew you can always back out and make a different cyoa.

>>10528936
>I'm going to be that guy and invoke Sartre and make my own rules
>Changes from CYOA
>1) Spell Points aren't determined by fetishes. Instead you gain 6 spell points for your primary school and 4 spell points for your secondary.
>2) You start with 20 points for Boons.
>3) Corruption points aren't gained from spells and the Embrace Corruption boon isn't an option. Instead Corruptions can either give spell points equal to their 'cost' for the appropriate color (I.e. Slut gives 1 Yellow Spell Point while Mental Changes gives 2 Green Spell Points) or points for boons equal to their 'cost' times fives. Power of Corruption gives mana equal to the total 'cost' of all corruptions you take.

I like those changes.

Primary school: Green

>Enlarge+
>Gender Swap
>Alter Age+
>Transform+
>Invigorate+

Secondary school: Yellow

>Normalify+
>Charm
>Liquid Production+
>Heighten Libido
>Heighten Sensitivity
>Add Flavor

Hidden Power: Time Stop+

Mana Pool: 29
Mana Regeneration: Shapeshifter, Mana Potion

Boons:
>Mana Conduit
>Planeswalker (all of them)

Corruption:
>Random Orgasms (1 YSP)
>Urges (2 YSP)
>Flasher (1 YSP)
>Mana Tanks (2 USP)
>Mental Change (2 GSP)
>Fairy Rapists (1 GSP, 5 BP)
>Random Transformation (5 BP)
>Magomaniac (5 BP)
>Magic Feedback (10 BP)
>Sexy Girl (5 BP)

Still have to make a build for Infection, but I'm never quite sure what exactly I want to do with the strains.

>>10533605
eronomicon is good, though? People are always going to complain. I didn't like the virus one much, but this one is good.

>>10534097
It's good, very much so, but there are some crippling balance problems that Tok seems to be ignoring because he doesn't want the work that it would take to fix.

That's why the only changes have been things that can be altered with just a few keystrokes such as typos, rather than anything that requires effort.

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>>10533139
TokHaar here, last update for Eronomicon. Won't be changing the Corruption points system since I think it kinda ruins the lore and integrity of Eronomicon and some of what makes it unique.

Changelog
Green
>Enlarge: New description
>Shrink: New description
>Transform: New Description
>Gender Swap: New Description
>Invigorate: New Description
Pink
>Empower: Can be purchased a second time.

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>>10534194
>Made a strawpoll about corruption so that the small handful of complainers will be shown that the cyoa is fine as it is
>BTFO by a huge margin because it's actually an issue for most people
>I-I-I won't change it because it's what makes Eronomicon unique and special.

Nigger, what are you even doing?

>>10534194
>All the green spells dont need to be bought and upgraded to do basic shit now
Arigato, Senpai!

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>>10534259
>Huge margin
Almost as many people said no or I don't care.

>>10534286
Less than half COMBINED

Is there a futa girlfriend cyoa?

>>10534259
All he needs to do is have a boon to purge a single point of corruption or have non school specific corruptions that can be taken.

>>10534298
don't care and no amount to the same thing

>>10534302
yes

>>10534311
>21+24=56
I'm not that guy, but your math needs some work.

>>10534311
>implying don't care isn't "The entire CYOA is shit."

>>10534311
Dont care is literaly "do whatever I dont car I dont even know why I voted" And even if they were all nos its STILL LESS THAN HALF

>>10534328
As someone who went for idc, it meant that I was fine with both options.

>>10534325
reading comprehension is a useful skill

>>10534392
Maybe you shouldnt ignore that even though you're wrong about them being the same thing they are less than half even when put together.

>>10534311
You can't really vote that you don't care and then complain about the decision he made.

>>10534240
The last box separator thing still splits the pink options into two boxes. Should it perhaps be between the second row of pink options and first row of red options, so each box would contain corruptions for schools whose spells share a page (first box yellow and green, second box blue purple and pink, third box red and black)?

>>10534298
>>10534343
>>10534259
TokHaar here, I said I diden't want to change the Corruption system because it ruins the lore, integrity and artistic vision for Eronomicon. The corruption is a vital part of Eronomicons uniqueness and flavor. Changing it would make Eronomicon more generic and something it was not intended to be. If you don't want to take the drawbacks for a certain school, then don't take too many spells. Making the CYOA easier and catering to people who want to take more powers for less penalties is a slippery slope. If I back down now, this will only embolden the people who wants minimum drawbacks and maximum powers to whine at every CYOA I make. Eronomicons artistic integrity and core mechanics will not be changed to make the CYOA easier.

>>10534194
does upgraded Transform do anything other than save you the mana of having to cast multiple spells?

>>10534433
Look, tokhaar, I understand what you're saying you said the same things before for your other cyoa's when queried about possible changes, but you did make a poll meaning you were once open to the suggestion of giving the corruption mechanic a slight tweak.
Now that doesn't mean you have to make an overhaul to the mechanic but at the very least do some adjustment that caters to the result of the poll.
Like you could have a boon that depends on the amount of points you put into the boon you can change the amount of corruption points equal to half of the total amount of spell points you placed into the boon. This keeps your corruption system while gives the player an option to choose a corruption with a price.

>>10534433
That's fair. I never complained about the drawbacks, just chiming in. Do you feel the entry-point to the CYOA may be a bit restrictive? I have a smattering of interests (1-6 points max) in any given color and thus want spells from a variety of colors, the only color that doesn't actually interest me being Purple. And at most, I could spend 15 excess Points (and basically get nothing else in Boons) to be able to spend points in one more school out of the 5. I get it's your pages your rules, but how do you feel about the opening and the limitations it poses to more vanilla and/or people with heavily mixed interests?

>>10534489
>does upgraded Transform do anything other than save you the mana of having to cast multiple spells?
TokHaar here, pretty much no. It only saves you mana, but a lot of mana if you want to do major changes.

>>10534433
Fine either way, but I just don't understand why you'd make a strawpoll like this when changing things to suit the result wasn't in the cards?

>>10534512
I haven't been keeping track, what's the complaint? Is it just that people think the corruption is too severe?

>>10534552
IMO I wouldn't spend more than 6 spell points in a given school anyway. Corruption gets out of control. The only real disadvantage is that you don't have as many points to spend on boons.

>>10534569
not enough choices I think. I've seen green having one less available corruption choice because it has 2 mutualy exclusive transformations brought up a few times. desu plant fits the nature theme and slime fits the transformation theme but goo is shit because you will always be goo in all forms so it should get the boot.

>>10534562
>>10534512
TokHaar here, well I changed my mind and sometimes I do that. Simple as that and I will always do whatever I feel is best for my CYOAs.

>>10534512
>>10534552
No more changes, final version. On to new adventures.

>>10534569
Well the complaints are generally balance issues (which is a common complaint for tokhaars content), the restrictiveness of drawbacks and the lack of content.
The first one is already a meme so we can ignore that issue. The second issue makes the cyoa very restrictive due to the only getting drawbacks related to your school which can be so bad that you wouldn't buy anything from one school even though you have 14 points available to spend there (I'm looking at you red) as well as lowering the amount of variety in builds.
Ways to fix this would be having a way to change the your corruption colour and/or having neutral corruption options.
The lack of content thing is due to the hype to cyoa got. Everyone expected that it'll have at least one ability for all the fetishes listed but that would've taken the overall cyoa ages to make and longer to make good.

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>>10534212
>Purple is my highest affinity tied with green and yellow being behind by 1 point
>None of the other fetishes are represented in Purple at all and has literally none of the fetishes I care about in purple outside of tentacles.
>no Symbiotes but parasite trash is represented
>Vore fetish isn't even fucking represented

I don't expect you to correct it. But it really pisses me off nonetheless.

>>10534643
Fair enough, but at the very least think ahead before you make a poll in the future.

How does unlimited power interact with mana tanks?

Why does unlimited power break so many things and yet there are no notes or rulings on those things?

>>10534609
That's not the point I was trying to make. I wouldn't even want to spend more than like 3 or 4 in ANY given school, but would want to spend at least 1 or 2 in most of them.
>Yellow
Normal 1, Liquid 2.
>Green
Enlarge 2, Transform 1
>Blue
Time 2
>Nothing in Purple or Pink to be totally honest
>Red
Law 2
>Black
Raise Dead 2, Curse 2
That's literally all that interest me and unless I go into Pink and also spend 15 points for a third school, it's physically impossible for me to get everything I want and am then left with basically no other Boons.
>Inb4 just don't play
At this point I'm not, cause it's clearly not for me.

>>10534700
Unlimited power + mana tanks = unlimited balls+/breasts

>>10534569
>what's the complaint?
The complaint is: "I want more powers and less severe drawbacks."

>>10534722
So I can set them wherever I want, like a mini transformation?

>>10533523
Paint, really? Wow.

I've been on a kick, fussing over CYOA ideas of my own, and I almost got a concept written out.

>>10534700
Your tits are always at max size. It isn't a "your tits max size scale with max mana" thing where you'd engulf the universe in boob. They're just always at their largest size.

>>10534569
>Green has less corruption choice
>Red corruption options are far less palatable for people with Red fetishes than other schools' corruption is for people with their fetishes.
>Red spells in general are mostly inferior versions of Blue and Yellow spells
>Given that most schools have a mixture of okay drawbacks and painfully restrictive drawbacks, you can generally only take a small number of spells from each school because otherwise the downsides from corruption are far worse than the benefits from the spells.

>>10533523
>Yes, and I work in MS Paint.
I don't know what to say to this, other than I'm pretty sure that even learning how to use gimp would take less time than making two versions of the same cyoa in paint.
>>10533546
Monster Girl Survival Island, which I don't have saved, but was actually posted on /tg/.

>>10534717
Actually, just realized I screwed up, I couldn't even get everything if I wanted to. I'm fine with taking heavy drawbacks for what I want, but I don't even have that option.

How does unlimited power work with corruption sickness?

>>10534552
As I understand it, the whole thing was conceived around the idea of specialization. Seems like most the issues people have are related to that, you'd essentially need a whole CYOA worth of content for each specialization to give everyone the amount of choices they're used to, and even then you'd have people complaining about not being able to just pick and choose freely.

Surprised he didn't just make more modes. Something as simple as this would probably be enough to shut people up.

>Seven-Colored Mage (aka easymodo)
>All spell points and corruption points you gain are prismatic and can be used for any color.

>>10534717
just make a small-footprint build. You don't have to buy everything you could ever want. eg you could make a build with just Time Stop and Normalize.

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You know tok, sometimes less is more, and it even neatly prevents you from making some of the most retardedly broken sentences ever

>>10534855
Hell, easier than that:
>All Spell points are Prismatic
>Corruption points generated from Spell points are not
Then he retains the "uniqueness" while also sating scrubs like me.
>>10534861
Fair enough, I suppose. Just feels like such a waste.

>>10534643
You might've seen this from the reddit thread, but - would it be possible to add a corruption option that lets the monstergirls raping you steal/copy spells from you? Or let your spill go off at random? Cough, fairy rapists getting grown/drowning the mage in cum, Cough.

>>10534323
Please post it

>>10534875
You cut out a very important part that was exclusive to upgraded enlarge and shrink so cutting it out changes it completly.

>>10535015
It doesn't, because those parts aren't in enlarge and shrink anymore. When you remove exceptions that means those exceptions don't exist anymore.

>>10535005
I dont have it.

>>10534643
Btw, kinda tired here so I'm having trouble parsing how many points an upgraded spell costs. Is it 1 for learning the spell + 2 for upgraded or is it just a total of 2 points to get one?

>>10535025
If you dont say that transform now has those abilities then nobody is going to know it can do it. It just causes more trouble by cutting it out for no reason.

>>10535027
to get the upgaded spell is 2 points as a total. 1 for the base and 1 to upgrade it.

>>10535027
Total of 2 for an upgraded spell, just like in Sex Magic.

>>10535038
>If you dont say that transform now has those abilities then nobody is going to know it can do it.
Except the people who are capable of reading a simple sentence.

>>10535058
>>10535056
Thanks

>>10535038
I'd say it creates trouble the way it is now, since it goes into detail about a very specific thing while not talking about literally hundreds of equal uses of the spells in the positive. The detailed attention to body part size could make people think transform doesn't allow you to change colorations, for example.

>>10535143
It's important because it literaly gained the ability that was exclusive to other spells. It is a funamental change in it use from previous versions.

>>10533375
Class: CQC
Equipment: Just A Knife (200)

>>10533391
Height: Tall (196)
Breasts: Large (194)
Ass: Large (192)
Penis: N/A
Extras: Masochist (167), Sadist (117), Hyper-Sensitive (112), Fully Female (137)

>>10533397
Frag Grenade x 15 (47), Flashbang x 10 (17), Teleport Crystal x 5 (2)

I'm probably going to get shot and raped a lot. But it'll be a lot of fun anyway, and even more fun when I don't.

>>10535183
You're too retarded for words.

Do you even know what an exception is in the first place?

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>>10535219

>>10534194
I actually really liked eronomicon. From what I can tell even among my own friends the point system is strange unless you look at the artistic context for which they were fine after.

None of us really minded the corruption instead we had two minor complaints.

1. Summonable monster girls that rape you only on blue with 5% chance
2. Planeswalker being very expensive.

Other than that it was fun and we found it entertaining to compare point values to others here (other than the super deviants that got 50+ we are actually above the curb)

>>10534194
>pink has 9 points
>second most has 6 points
>don't want my magic use to be reliant upon a deity
well fug

>>10535788
>don't want my magic use to be reliant upon a deity
Then don't choose pink as your primary?

>>10535830
Yeah I guess that's the obvious response. I just felt like I was putting so many points to waste though.

>>10534674
Man, your definition of Monster seems way to narrow.

>>10535830
Oh never mind, I read the description of the boons incorrectly.

>>10535850
use them on boons

>>10534194
>Deviant enough for Unlimited Power despite a nice number of spells
>Hype for Living Clothes corruption
>Clothes are impossible to remove and prevent spellcasting and only revert once you run out of mana
>Infinite mana
fug

>>10535215
>>10535219
Round and Perky Breasts
Wild and Dense Pubic Hair
Girlish Frilly Panties, Classt Lingerie, Risky and Bare
Mature Adult Bra, Sensual Babydoll, Tantalizing and Free
Fashionable Style
Glasses, Bondage Ropes, Phone
Masturbate, Seduce Girls, Sleepover
Big Sister
Cool, Teasing

I learned everything I needed to know about being a woman from my older sister. How to dress with style, how to walk with confidence, how to go just far enough to tantalize and leave girls hungry for more. And, of course, all those amazing pleasures only another woman can share with you. We're still quite close, but I think it's well past time I started putting her lessons to good use.

>type in cyoa as usual in catalog
>no cyoa thread found
>get nervous
>maybe everyone left for some other place and i'm left alone here with no new cyoa's
>maybe japanese moot hates cyoa's and banished them even from /trash/
>sweatypalms.jpg
>type "choose your own" with shaking hands into the search field
>thread found
fucking op
also where did the archive link go

>>10531199
Love
Switch
Long ponytail
Brown
Androgynous
Average
French
Skimpy
Fancy
Nightgown
Neutral Fem
Play along
Enjoying it
Neat freak
Happy
Popsicles

Cooking
Cleaning
Shopping
Gardening
Massaging

Vibrator I control.
Choker


Sub - Warm embrace, Teasing, Girl, Emasculation,Blowjobs,Denial, Public, cum, nipple play,
Dominant - Tease, Licking, Ontop, Reversal.

Blowjob, From behind, Missionary, Beads, Table


A delightful maid who gets back at me for my mistakes, lewdness, teasing when we go to sleep at night.

>>10536013
This was moved from /d/ and everyone just ship-hopped last night.

>>10534194
What's Fannypacking and Somnophila?

>>10536210
Running around with a person strapped to your chest and your cock buried inside them.

Sleep sex. Sex with sleeping people, or sleeping people having sex, sleepwalking style.

>>10534194
>>10534212
>>10534226
>>10534240
You know what? Fuck the arguing, I'm making a build.

>Points Roundup
Yellow: 4 (Impregnation, Ahegao, Normalisation, Public Use)
Green: 3 (Monster Girls, Gender Swap, Bimboficiation)
Blue: 4 (Time Stop, Magical Girls, Hypnotism, Mind Break)
Purple: 1 (Corruption)
Pink: 3 (Cuckquean, Worship, Submission)
Red: 14 (All of them)
Black: 7 (Loli, Torture, Snuff, Bestiality, Nightmare Fuel, Amputee, Incest)

>Magic
Primary School: Red
Secondary School: Black
Mana Pool: 44
Mana Regeneration Methods: Mana Leech, Power Of Darkness

>Spells
Red Spells: Enslave 2, Hex 2, Enforce Law 2, Drain Strength 2
Black Spells: Raise Dead 2, Curse (Sexy Girl, Slut), Soul Drain 2

>Boons (Points: 25)
Immortality, Power Of Corruption, Mana Conduit

>Corruptions
Red: All of them
Black: Cannibal, Blood Lust, Sinister Aura

>>10536013
>also where did the archive link go
Right here: >>10531318

>>10536255
>Running around with a person strapped to your chest and your cock buried inside them.
Well, I think I have a new fetish now. Seems niche as fuck though, compared to things like sweat or body odor that got left out.

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>>10536341
imagine a large monster with a woman tied to his chest and impaled on his massive dick while he casualy walks around doing whatever. Often similarly done with a woman tied to the underside of a horse too.

>>10535373
Doing /d/ cyoas with friends...
I...Don't know what to say or think of this.
It's like a circlejerk but with reading.

>>10536445
I understand it, I just think TokHaar's included some real niche stuff at the expense of some really common kinks.

>>10536341
>>10536481
If you wanted them that badly, you should have spammed Tok with sweaty porn to convince him to do it.

Because it's not getting in there now.

>>10536462
I can imagine them swordfighting to decide what colour is the superior one

>>10536462
Not exactly we dont exactly circle fap. More like we just kinda share builds out of boredom and have nothing better to do

>>10536632
Do you give each other handjobs, and the loser has to conceded the point whenever you disagree on something?

>>10534212
Red
Power of Dominance
Enslave

Pink
Divice Radiance
Summon Deity (futa)
Upgraded Pocket dimension


Corrupt 4 Red 2 Pink


Sadist
Nymphomaniac

Role Reversal
Sadist
Kink Wardrobe
Vamp girl

>>10536669
Kinda hard to do over the internet so no. Also I am straight and most of my female friends are dating my other friends

>>10536632
Videogames, streaming a movie/show are the two things people do over the internet with their friends when they're bored, not talk about refu/d/ fetish images on a korean turtle shell board

>>10533523
>Yes, and I work in MS Paint. Also any time I spend on editing this, is time I could spend relaxing and preparing for my next CYOA.
You have other, free options, you're just choose not to take them. So don't blame your tools.

>>10536794
Videogames yes. Movies and shows no we arent that interested in a ton of non-interative mediums nowadays.

It's not specifically /d/ cyoas. More like cyoas in general that are interesting. We basically approach it with the same casual nature people post builds here since we dont really care if someone is weird.

>>10536860
Sounds like a nice friend group. Wish my friends were that open.
I'm playing it with my bf instead though.

>>10534194
Yellow + 8
Green + 7
Blue + 9
Purple + 10
Pink + 11
Red + 13
Black + 4

Primary School: Pink
Mana Regenration: Divine Radiance
Spell: Summon Deity+ - 2

Secondary School: Blue

Boon: Discrete Spellcasting - 5
Boon: Immortality - 0
Boon: Planeswalker (Arcanum) - 15
Boon: Unlimited Power - 40

Corruption: Nymphomaniac - 1

plz!>>10534194

What would happen if i cast charm or Charm+ on my goddess when she has to bully me because of corruption?

I just want some gentle femdom

>>10538115
TokHaar here, well it would be gentler, but not very much. But it's better then nothing I guess.

>>10538404
Do you plan to update your CYOA? For so many power source fetishes each aspect gives rather few spells, often not indulging those fetishes at all.

Other feedback:
Being a /d/eviant enjoying variety, who had on average 5 points in each category, I kinda got screwed in how many spells I could take as I am limited to only two aspects. I'd like there to be an option of some jack-of-all-trades so I can at least have several spells. Certainly at least one spell/summoning per each fetish included would be what Id' expect though I understand that's a tall order in its own regard.

Some spells should be available to several different groups. For example, I dont' see how stuff like Charm fits Yellow but not Blue which is mentality-changing-related. It could also fit Pink and Red easily - it belongs there as much imho as in yellow, possibly even more.

The drawbacks thing is kind of major let down - some are interesting but majority of them is being transformed, usually with genderswap. It's all one kind of fetish that should be restricted to drawbacks of one, maybe two different aspects related to transformation and gender bending. I generally think drawbacks should only kick in at noticeably high levels of power in particular path. Right now they're almost unavoidable.

Mana is kinda pointless. We are already limited by number of spells we can choose and the CYOA doesn't go as far as to require us to cast spells with any particular frequency. Keeping it vague or having spells limited by how many times/for how long they can be cast per day would be better.

>>10539118
>Do you plan to update your CYOA?
He's said several times in this thread that he won't update any more and that he doesn't give a shit about poor balance between schools or issues with corruption mechanics.

>>10539118
He said he's not going to update, anon.
Just take it with stride, maybe use the frustration to make a good /d/cyoa.

>>10539200
>>10539211
I am pretty much disappointed in such case. Certainly for all the hype - the weakest Tok CYOA, especially compared to the advertised and implied scale of how big it'd be. Maybe because of that hype expectations were too high.

Well, at least I had some entertainment, for a very short time. Thanks for the answer and yeah, I'll try to use the disappointment productively.

>>10534328
Pretty much this. Tok was one of the best lewd CYOA creators but he really dropped the ball on this one. It was too huge to work without really a lot of effort being put into it and he didn't have what it took.

>>10539580
>Implying Eronomicon did not take a lot of effort to make

>>10539682
No matter how much effort it took, he doesn't get brownie points as it's how well it came out and how well it lived to what we were promised that matters. And it's not that good - limited options compared to the scale, absolutely shitty balance. The scale of the project was huge so I understand it would be hard to make it, but the fact that the failure was likely doesn't make it less of a failure. I'd like to enjoy it but it sadly, it doesn't hold candle to other H CYOA, including his own.

Rate Eronomicon
https://strawpoll.com/axa269h4

It's like 7 CYOAs with 1/7th the content of a full one put into a single CYOA but only being allowed to use 2/7 of the content.

>>10539994
Hyped but dissapointed that it was basicaly a sectioned off version of perverted magic.

>>10540017
That's actually a pretty good description.
>>10539994
>no "I can't feel anything about it but disappointment" option

>>10540017
That's pretty spot on, anon.

I mean technicaly there is a lot of content to it but the fact that it's so limited makes it feel very small.
6x7 spells is a lot of spells but you get access to 6x2 and limited by not just points to buy them but also the corruptions to pay for them so it sort of limits them further.

I think it could have been pulled off much better and would have if it werent limited souly to balance it for people with a small number of fetishes. I mean if there was no 2 school limit and you still had to manage points for boons and paying off the corruption in each school then I thing it would be much better and actualy looks like how it was intended to be. Had something great then crippled it.

>>10540220
I agree, if it wasn't so restrictive on making you choose only two schools of magic it would've worked. The primary school I liked but there was no reason to only allow the user to have only two schools. I mean he could've went with the route of the primary school gives you perks but to get into another school you have to spend a small cost.
For the corruption he could've had some way of changing your form of corruption into some other form by spending a price of twice the number of spell points of the chosen corruption color that you want to transfer the original corruption to, this would give the user to second guess themselves to see if they really want to use spell points to for a less worse corruption instead of a boon they were looking for.

>>10534194
Gonna do a full rewrite of eronomicon, here's what I have so far

Eronomicon Rewrite
Remove power based on # of fetishes, give primary (6 domain points), secondary (4 domain points), and tertiary (1 domain point)
Change spells into broader domains
Change boons completely
symbolizes that an option can/will directly grant immortality
symbolizes that an option operates without requiring mana
Boons (one free, regular cost one drawback, major cost major drawback): inaccurate planeswalker (major: accuracy), massive leaky reserves (major: fast recharge instead of leak), metamagic (major: contingencies), diversify (gain additional set of primary traits from any school, major also gain one domain in all except primary and secondary), physical empowerment (reduce magical pool in order to magically greatly empower self, major grants endless endurance and crazy regeneration), 3 more

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>Be me
>Come up with an awesome idea for a CYOA
>Call it Eronomicon
>People seem to love it
>Think about making it, but realize that there are going to be some problems with the CYOA that are unavoidable.
>Explain to people why it won't be made and make another CYOA call it Deus Vult
>Take RS vacation
>Come up with and awesome idea, call it Infected
>Make strawpool about what next CYOA to make after Infected
>Overwhelming Majority vote Eronomicon
>Maybe people don't mind the problems with Eronomicon that are unavoidable by design, because they love the concept so much they are willing to overlook them
>Decide to make Eronomicon
>Spend shit tons of time making Eronomicon and reducing said problems.
>Make Eronomicon
>Some people love it
>Some people bitch and whine about the problems which they were warned about.
>Look at bitching and whining people
>Some how am not surprised in the slightest

>>10540220
>I think it could have been pulled off much better and would have if it werent limited souly to balance it for people with a small number of fetishes.
It's not even small number of fetishes in general for me, it's the fact that you're boned if you have them spread over many categories, that most of the fetishes that give you points have actually no or little relation to category they're in (at least the effects of their spells) and that balance of costs, drawbacks, categories in which some spells belong - are all a goddamn mess.

You're right that on their own, the number of options isn't bad for average-sized CYOA. But for the size of what seemed to have been intended here, it doesn't even cut bare minimum, and that ignoring aforementioned balance and categorization mess.

General traits: 1 time appearance/gender/age/identity change , porn physics , basic lewd magery (temporary increase size, minor sexual healing, minor increase arousal, etc.)
Yellow primary trait: normalize (self explanatory, recharge magic with sexual acts, especially with virgins and the chaste), lucky (you will get into fun situations with ease)
Green primary traits: desire drive (change into people’s sexual fantasies and back, recharge magic with sexual acts while transformed, the more Mana recharged the further a body is from your own), self improvement (alter yourself psychologically)
Blue primary traits: ley lines (draw power from places of magical significance, recharge rate improved with ritual sex), fairy familiar (helps to learn new magics and domains at faster rate, can shag for slow Mana regen)
Purple primary traits: Eldritch tools (mutate genitals into superior eldritch versions, recharge magic using it for sex, especially with magical beings), abyssal friendship (can navigate the abyss somewhat and talk with abyssals)
Pink primary traits: perfect submissive (gain ability to intuit the desires of others, recharges Mana, more so when carrying out orders you dislike), wanted (luck in finding people in a superior position only, and not just sexually, much weaker for nonsexual things)
Red primary traits: domination (gain power in forcing people to do thing you want them to, weaker for nonsexual and doesn’t recharge Mana), terror (mortals afraid to retaliate against you, less effective the more dominant and powerful the person is)
Black primary traits: iconoclast (gain mana when engaging in socially transgressive acts, gain some power vs mortals necessary to complete/enjoy the act), joker (gain luck in escaping consequences of transgressive acts)

Yellow domains: advanced eromancy (advanced: mass eromancy), charm (advanced: mass charm), luck magic (advanced: fate magic), food magic (advanced: gluttony), summon humanoid (advanced: summon houri), 1 more
Green domains: polymorphing (advanced: impossible), alchemy (advanced: superior), druidism (advanced: elements), medicine (advanced: fleshcraft), summon wild animals (advanced: summon mythical animals), 1 more
Blue domains: traditional arcana (advanced: wizardry), divination (advanced: prophecy), space (advanced: non-euclidian), time (advanced: dangerous), forces (advanced: advanced forces),
Purple domains: abyssal portals (advanced: safe transit), summon abyssal (advanced: self-control), progeny (advanced: intelligent progeny), wards (advanced: banishment), corruption (advanced: spreading), abyssal guide (advanced: abyssal lordship)
Pink domains: holy magic (advanced: divine magic), summon angel (advanced: Divine Avatar), bestow (advanced: multiple bestow), heal (advanced: resurrect), 2 more
Red domains: domination (advanced: mind control), summon demon (major: major demon), drain (advanced: devour soul), order magic (advanced: enforce law), curse (advanced: contingent curse/reward), 1 more
Black domains: endings (advanced: countermagic), necromancy (advanced: intelligent dead), reversal (advanced: mass flip), voodoo (advanced: spirit magic), chaos (advanced: random mutation), dreams (advanced: brought to life)

>>10540393
Should have made a headpat and handholding cyoa instead.

Curses (notes even out drawbacks so minor drawbacks are frustrating and major crippling)
Pick one non-upgraded from primary school, and any more from schools you have at least 1 domain in needed to even out boons
Universal drawbacks: resistable (magery) powers from this school can be resisted by sheer willpower, even from ordinary mortals and animals, major even people without exceptional will can; paradox (magery) if a spell would seem impossible, or is used to directly affect a mortal, it will dramatically unravel, the more mortals observing or affected, the greater the effect, major causes horrible backlash on you when it happens; witchcraft! (Magery) the opposite of normalize, magery disturbs and angers mortals, major causes magic resistance in affected mortals and pinpoints you as source; hostility magnet (personal) always have challenging enemies, major means enemies are guaranteed personally malicious and of at least equal strength
Yellow drawbacks: apple of discord (aura) people in your area become increasingly interested in you in every way they could, to unhealthy degrees, decays over time, major causes any reasonably accurate representation of you to carry this effect and effect decays over 1/year pers hour of exposure rather than 1 day/hour of exposure; unwilling saviour (aura) you attract damaged people looking for a quick lay, the more powerful and unhealthy the person, the greater the attraction, major specifically attracts damaged magical beings; bimbo (personal) your wits and ability are decreased when not actively engaged in a sexual act, major your wits and ability are decreased period, especially when not in sexual act; ban (personal) cannot reject any non-suicidal sexual requests to things you are attracted to without being weakened, major does not allow you to rules lawyer your way out of or delay a request; Soul leak (personal) your mana drains when not engaged in a sexual act, major you cannot cast when not actively having sex, 1 more

I mean what's there is 4 pages and what you actualy have access to is more like 2. There are 3 sectioned areas per page. If you take what we typicaly only have access to it's 1 for the intro/fetish list, 2 for both schools, 1 for boons and the corruptions for both schools can actualy fit on a single section together so we end up having access to 5/12 sections of the CYOA which is just under 2 full pages. So over half the CYOA is inaccessable and basicaly ignored. Non-deviants with low fetishes ruin everything, or do because of how Tok interperited the fetish number poll and decided to try balance for some reason even though it balances itself from the corruption cost anyway.

Green drawbacks: curse of tzeench (aura) everything around you is warped over time, major means things get can get dangerously warped; dominant Id (magery) your spells occasionally go off with prompting, based on subconscious desires, major this is a constant occurrence; inexact (magery) your transformations are less exact, the more exact in one area, the more random in others, major your transformations are all but random, you can only give a general idea of what you want; mercurial mind (magery) your transformations cause the subject to constantly change personality, the more dramatic the transformation, the quicker and more dramatic the change, major the personality changes make no sense; tell () more
Blue drawbacks: lewd lock (aura) power of lewd magic is limited by how much lewd action is going on nearby, major when no action is going on, lose mana rapidly; ley line reliant (magery) magic power drops sharply away from ley lines, major you only have access to your powers on ley lines; burning soul (magery) reliant on magic energy for sustenance, as well as any other sustenance normally needed and hitting none causes you to starve, major you chew through magic power fast (as fast as massive recharging reserves) and hitting zero causes instant death; more
Purple drawbacks: abyssal prey (personal) abyssals not controlled by you will attack, major you are bait for them; broodmother (personal), your powers are weakened with insufficient progeny under your control nearby, major your control over your progeny is weak; 4 more

>>10540434
Even for /trash/ this is going too far.

Pink drawbacks: faith (magery) powers reliant on personal faith that it will work and prayer, major relies on the faith of everyone around as well; easy victim (personal) people's morality goes away when dealing with you, and you draw attention of sociopaths, major effects society as a whole; altruism (personal) your powers are greatly weakened when used not to the benefit of other people, major makes your powers unable to be used for harmful purposes, even in self-defense; commanded (personal) you must struggle to resist carrying out any direct order, major resisting the order must come from your own willpower entirely, 2 more
Black drawbacks: compulsion (personal) must act in a at least somewhat transgressive way, even if not beneficial to self, major forces you to be as transgressive even in ways that contradict your own personal morals; mirror (personal) your own personality and goals are the opposite of everyone surrounding you, you can fight this with willpower, major forces you to oppose one person at all times, undeath (personal) you are human but look like a rotting corpse, major you actually are a zombie, and are resistant to healing and will decay without it; 3 more

>>10540393
I love the idea, the execution needs some work, but if it turned out how you wanted it, that's all that matters. People will always bitch.

>>10540390
I'd recommend you checking
>>10534259
>>10534432
>>10534552
>>10539118
>>10539805
>>10540220
>>10540388
>>10540399
All of them offer quite some feedback on why Tokhaar fucked up this time. Read through, note down the feedback and then there's hope. Please don't attempt the rewrite if you aren't up for really solid several times*this expansion as for its scale, it really needs a lot fo content and I'd rather have one crap CYOA that may be forgotten than crap CYOA and its crappy rewrite.

Aside from that, I actually liked how anon's fetishes affected one's choices though I agree it could be pretty unfair toward some. Maybe some flavors/spell modifiers dependant on kinks could be incorporated instead?

>>10540393
It was a great idea, and you did it for the sake of /d/ alone.

>>10540494
Speaking of critique, I did think of another method of "fixing" one issue I had (the overly restrictive start) in a few ways:
>A Boon that costs 1 Spell Point of any Color and lets you convert another Spell Point to any other Color
>A Boon that lets you gain up to 2 Spells (1 if Upgraded) of any Type for double their regular cost (Boon itself having no cost)

I have one problem with Eronomicon : it's not a nerve-jacked VR.
What the fuck is up with that, lazy creator.

>>10540434
Woah man, I know the final solution is nice to joke about here and there but actually considering it?
Furries would go to the forests to hide, guro/snuff fanatics would hide in prison out of fear, ntrfags would forcefully baptise themselves to become purityfags.
We don't want judgment day, we are already in hell in /trash/ but bringing that dirty bomb will...well I wouldn't lose any respect for god for not forgiving such a sin.

>>10540528
anon, I don't want to be the bearer of bad news but....he posted it on reddit.

>>10540393
>there are going to be some problems with the CYOA that are unavoidable.
Bullshit, even in this thread people dropped ideas how many problems could have been avoided or may be solved. It'd just take quite some work.

>Maybe people don't mind the problems with Eronomicon that are unavoidable by design, because they love the concept so much they are willing to overlook them
People were all for Eronomicon because you advertised it as a huge CYOA taking all kinds of anon fetishes into account, giving one plenty of varied powers related to what they're into. Certainly "and I'll shit on balance, leave only a small number of choices anywhere, force some drawback kinks often unrelated to one's preferences and then do nothing 'since its unique that way' and generally abandon it half-assed" wasn't part of the spiel when I voted for it.

>Some how am not surprised in the slightest
You make crap way not only subpar to what was suggested in the hype but even normal quality people expected of you - you get shit. I am hardly surprised either.

Take it as a learning experience, bury this shit, make sure to avoid similar mistakes when designing future works.

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>>10540393
>Tok's face right now

>>10540549
That could work but onyl if basic cost of spells would be balanced and in case of option two - nerfed because that would be seriously horribly expensive.

Actualy If I remember right he fucked it up and set the limit because of the poll on /tg/ to see how lewd they were. I mean if there literaly was not 2 school limit there would be much more enjoyment and much less bitching purely over the quality improvement of the CYOA as a whole for that simple change.

Like what the fuck is to point of ruining your own CYOA like that?

>>10540644
Everyone's elses face likely, too. The project was just too big for Tok to be able to do it without putting a really lot of work and time. And he put "only" as much as it'd take to make a regular-sized CYOA.

>>10540685
And then cut it up into pieces and said "take only 2 and dont complain about any glairing flaws because it took a long time"

>>10540709
True that.

>>10540685
A funny thing about it was that a lot of people were bitching about taking "be a girl" option as a drawback. A drawback that's not a desirable thing? Who would have guessed?

>>10540651
Uh Anon, the 2nd one is effectively the same as the first, but in reverse and slightly better if you have mixed interests.
>Spend 2 Points of any color, get 1 point of a specific color (first)
>Spend 2 Points of a specific color, get any Spell of the same color (Up to 2 times or add upgrade for 2 more Points)

>>10540393
It's really fucking hard to tell if this is actually tokhaar considering we're on /trash/ anyone can impersonate him.

>>10540731
I think half of that complaint was due to the green corruption having two pick a girl options while others have one.

>>10540757
Anyone could impersonate him on /d/. He didn't trip. Doesn't on /tg/ either.

>>10540494
Rewrite offers "Domains" which you have learned at the start, rather than individual spells such as medicine (advanced: fleshcrafting) for green, abyssal portals (advanced: abyssal domain) for purple, and chaos (advanced: mass chaos) for black. Someone could pick up vore, for instance, from green transformation, black dreams, purple corruption, or yellow gluttony. It's less limited to "just sex magic", and in hugely influenced by a new magical girl/a new dark magical girl.

"Aside from that, I actually liked how anon's fetishes affected one's choices though I agree it could be pretty unfair toward some. Maybe some flavors/spell modifiers dependant on kinks could be incorporated instead?"

rewrite will incorporate starting traits, so "pick 4 starting traits from fetishes" sounds like a good idea.

>>10540823
How do we even know if he's the real tok or not?
How do we know any comment that's presumably tok was tok in the past?
Is the only true way of telling is when he post cyoa?
Nobody knows.

>>10540731
>>10540782
Nah, I actually dislike how most drawbacks for each category are the same shit just slightly flavored. They were meant to be based on the category though and what we got instead was low-effort palette swap, especially the "now you're a girl" - even when physical transformation, yet alone genderbending at all are in domain of only one, maybe two colors.

Really, some parts seem like something Tok made when burned out, lacking ideas and just shoehorning stuff in so he can say it's done.
I kinda feel bad for him because he did put in work and he probably made some anons happy with new lewds but it does seem the most disappointing work of his so far. Hopefully ever.

>>10540847
Maybe Tok hasn't even made a CYOA in a long time and some facsimile of him has been doing it all.

>>10540899
I feel really bad for him. I really liked it but it seamed like half of the people just threw it right back in his face.
It's the nature of 4chan I guess. You can never please everyone, and the ones that aren't pleased will make damn sure you know that.

Well when the CYOA consists of 114 unique images of acceptable quality or higher that takes a long time to aquire specificaly for each option and the writing and ideas and mechanics takes who knows how much time and effort, its easy to see how he can be upset from what looks to be a lack of apreciation for his effort and mistake actual atempts to fix what is fundamentaly flawed and try to improve what's there for unapreciativeness, moaning and atempting to powergame somewhat.

>>10540995
>114 unique images
That's not even counting the censored version.

>>10540970
To be honest I kinda feel bad for him as well. It must hurt when your work for entertainment of others turns to be shat at so much. At the same time, peopel threw it back into his face not just because it's 4chan, but because it is the weakest thing he made so far they, or at least I, can recall.

>>10541107
The one that was basically "Use points to make your weeb merchandise become real, if you have none fuck you" was the weakest one IMO

>>10540494
Fetishes (gain the traits of 3 fetishes you possess, must actively find sex sexier with the act performed to select):
Public use: You gain normalize as per yellow primary, if you already have normalize, normalize applies to use of supernatural powers as well
Vore: You gain the ability to swallow anything of your size or smaller, like a snake. You can somehow still move around like this. Living creatures will be immobilized have their basic needs sustained and not be digested, and this gives you no ability to safely eat dangerous things. This doesn’t work on magical beings.
EITHER Impregnation OR condom use: You gain complete control over your own fertility, as well as that of all mortals within 10 meters or so.
Transformation: You gain desire dive, as per green primary. If you already have it, instead gain a modest trickle of mana from being in a form other than your own
Submission: any injuries sustained from submitting to another, whether mental or physical, you can recover from, provided you are not dead or completely mindbroken
Rape play: you gain a sixth sense for people who would enjoy being “ravaged”
Actual rape: you gain a sixth sense for people who it would be easy to take advantage of
Xenophilia: gain ability to communicate with non-human sapient species, and increased sexiness towards them

Does this work?

>>10541183
I don't recall that one at this point at all so maybe that's why I don't consider it the worst. Don't post it, anon, let me believe that Tok didn't get lower than Eronomicon.

>>10540644
TokHaar here, pretty much sums it up.

>>10540625
Cause reddit has a CYOA contest and I want to win.

>>10540438
Lets review the review
>paradox (magery)
>resistable (magery)
>witchcraft! (Magery)
So you want none-lewd drawbacks in a lewd CYOa, which only limits your powers and are not as hard to live with as the lewd drawbacks. On top of it it has NOTHING to do with corruption the mind and body of the Eromancer. Please go on anon, this seems very interesting...
>apple of discord (aura)
You want a a drawback which works like Charm, so basically free Charm with minor Yandere tenancies. At least it is lewd.
>unwilling saviour (aura)
So you want the same drawback but instead of yandere you want damaged people, very creative.
>bimbo (personal)
This 1 is acctually not bad, I have to give credit where credit is due.
>ban (personal)
So a carbon copy of the already existing Slut, very imaginative.
>Soul leak (personal)
This 1 would be okey if it wasn't slight variation of bimbo (personal).

>>10540459
>curse of tzeench (aura)
Tzeench has nothing to do with green eromancy since its basically nature magic, just no anon....
>dominant Id (magery)
Green is nature magic, meta magic is blue eromancy. This is completely ruining the identity of Green Eromancy.
>inexact (magery)
Another none-lewd drawback for a lewd CYOa keep it up!
>mercurial mind (magery)
You want identity death in Green when it belongs to Blue. Great.
>lewd lock (aura)
Super abstract idea you think I will magically be able to balance, anthoer great idea.
>ley line reliant (magery)
>burning soul (magery)
More none-lewd drawback that have nothing to do with corruption, nice.
>abyssal prey (personal)
So uncontrolable abyssals? Which can be mind sculpted, enslaved or charmed to become controllable again, genious! very creative drawback!
>broodmother (personal)
Super vauge drawback that you think I will magically balance and make super balanced. Really a fan of your stuff anon.

>>10541277
>Cause reddit has a CYOA contest and I want to win.
Really? Anything interesting in that contest so far?

>>10541258
That's one way of going with it but I was thinking more along the lines of, for example:
>Spell: Transform Other:
>Change the victim of the spell into a vaguely beautiful person.
>If you've also chosen/have lolita fetish, you can change their age
>Ig you've also chosen/have xenophilia fetish, you can change them into inhuman (less humanlike than even most furries, but otherwise up to you) humanoid
>If you've also chosen bestiality, you can change them into non-humanoid, animal-like creature. Has to be at least in 90% based on traits belonging to representative of a particular animal specie.

And so on, and so on, though probably making such a list of modifiers for many, many fetishes would be a really lot of work so maybe just adding spells on the basis of personal kinks like how you suggest would be better (or at least more doable, because if it's to be quality-priority I still like my take or would even opt for both approaches at once but I really doubt anyone could handle it, it'd be Traveller-sized CYOA).

>>10541335
TokHaar here, no bunch of Reddit Gold, whatever that is. I said If I win that shit, they can keep it. But first place will get 25$ on steam. I don't want it tho. If I win I plan to do my own CYOA contest on /trash/ with the 25$ as a price pool, but only parasite CYOAs will be allowed to compete.

>>10535215
Youthful and Flat
Soft and Smooth
Pure Virginal White / Comfy Boxer Shorts / Risky and Bare
Athletic Sports / Plain Vest / Tantalizing and Free
Carefree
Remote Vibrator / Glasses / Taser
Masturbate / Seduce Girls / Seduce Boys / Sleepover
Little Brother / Big Sister
Cute on the surface / Perverted in the mind

Big sis taught me all of these fun games that can be played at sleepovers. Maybe my little brother can invite his friends, and I can invite my friends, and we can all have a giant sleepover and have lots of fun playing pervy games. :3

>>10541406
Symbote CYOAs would be ok ?
Symbiotes kinda are parasites...

>>10541406
>But first place will get 25$ on steam
I find this to be funny on several levels.

>>10541406

Hey TokHaar. Just wanted to say that I loved your Infected cyoa and I think it's your best one thus far.

I would love you long time if you made an expansion for it.

>>10541277
>"So you want none-lewd drawbacks in a lewd CYOa, which only limits your powers and are not as hard to live with as the lewd drawbacks. On top of it it has NOTHING to do with corruption the mind and body of the Eromancer. Please go on anon, this seems very interesting..."

Nothing wrong with that, and turning someone into a dryad futa is more of a reward than a drawback for a /d/eviant. Non lewd problems that inhibit your ability to be lewd are more drawbacky.

>"You want a a drawback which works like Charm, so basically free Charm with minor Yandere tenancies. At least it is lewd."
>So you want the same drawback but instead of yandere you want damaged people, very creative.

Both of them are different kinds of uncontrollable charm. Rather than making people like or obey you, it's make them dangerously obsessed with you- will combine into 1.

>So a carbon copy of the already existing Slut, very imaginative.

Very similar, but it works like a spiritual ban- rather than being forced to do something, you are spiritually required to do something, and will weaken if you do it. The difference between this and slut is the difference between not liking dog meat and chu chulain.

>complaining over colors being in wrong place

This is inspired by your version, not the same as.

>So uncontrolable abyssals? Which can be mind sculpted, enslaved or charmed to become controllable again, genious! very creative drawback!

"The elementals and plane of my power source are trying to rape me for eternity, this is totally not a problem"

>Super vauge drawback that you think I will magically balance and make super balanced.

Nope, this is inspired by yours, since you said you're not going to make a new version, I will

>Really a fan of your stuff anon.

I liked the idea behind your original, which is why I'm making a re-write, no need to be salty.

>>10541406
Okay, well I hope you win your competition on /r/eddit, because if you do, I'm going to win that 25$ in the next competition.

>>10541507
>I loved Infected and would love an expansion
TokHaar here, I'm glad you liked it, but I have no plans for a expansion on Infected and if there is something I learned from Eronomicon is that it is a horrible idea to listen to what other people want and then trying to give it to them. It's like a hollywood director listening to a board of business executives and trying to please them, it ends bad each time. Like creatives should never listen to anyone and just do their own thing, because that is when shit gets done.

>>10541681
>something I learned from Eronomicon is that it is a horrible idea to listen to what other people want and then trying to give it to them
But what does Eronomicon and listening to people have to do with eachother? :^)

>>10541681
Now you're taking a slippery slope, I didn't think you take the criticism to your latest cyoa that badly.
It's good to listen to others because their suggestions might help you improve your cyoa due to people having a different perspective on different things.

>>10541622
TokHaar here, looks like it. They love it at reddit and praises Eronomicon. Which is very mind boggling considering the backlash on 4chan. On only 1 day it got almost as many votes as CYOAs that have been up for weeks in that contest.

>>10541577
>Nope, this is inspired by yours, since you said you're not going to make a new version, I will
Do it, taking taking other authors hard work and then adding minor stuff to it that makes it easier to get powers is not something every CYOa author is capable of and it requires true talent. If all of your options are as creative as these I would very much like to see it.

>>10541681
Get the dragon dildo out of your ass and learn to accept that when making OC you WILL make mistakes and you WILL get criticism.

>>10541681
>Hey Tokhaar, here's a list of valid complaints about the cyoa. It's pretty good though.
>REEEEEEEE don't criticize my cyoa! Reddit says I'm the bestest of all time!
>Man, Tok is being a retard about this.
>"The moral of this story is to never listen to anyone because my vision is supreme and unquestionable."

I feel that you're drawing entirely the wrong conclusions from this.

>>10541374
As it is, the finished version will be a text document.

>so maybe just adding spells on the basis of personal kinks like how you suggest would be better

As I mentioned before, there are no discreet spells in the early version of the re-write, just traits (like normalize and porn physics) that change who your are, and domains (like druidism), where you develop your spells from (a list of example spells will be in any final version)(something like you start with 10 spells/functions from basic domains and an additional 5 from advanced on top of the basic)

>>10541744
>>10541747
>>10541839
I told people about Eronomicon BEFORE I made Deus Vult, I talked about the problems in Eronomicon and said I would do Deus Vult instead. Then I made a strawpool, added Eronomicon as a option becouse some people loved the idea so much. People voted Eronomicon and I thought they could overlook the problems which I talked about, because they loved the CYOA so much. I made Eronomicon and then people whine about what I warned them about.

>>10541792
Redditors opinions are ruled by mob rule, it's very hard to differentiate unless you want 100 downvotes and your opinion to be hidden at the bottom of the page.
4chan, there maybe a lot of retards (ironic or otherwise) but at least there are in no danger of speaking what's on your mind.

>>10541792
Because Reddit is fucking castrated and demolish any negative criticism with downvotes. It's a hugbox that wont give you actual criticsm and tell you if theres something wrong and just showers you with praise. Eronomicon has flaws that can be fixed, you know it but just refuse to do it. THE SCHOOL LIMIT REMOVES HALF YOUR FUCKING WORK AND MAKES IT FEEL TINY FOR FUCK SAKE.

>>10541926
Those probably weren't the ones who told you to make it.

>>10541947
>I diden't get all the powers, therefore the balance is shit.
>REEEEEEEEEEEE!

>>10541681
>if there is something I learned from Eronomicon is that it is a horrible idea to listen to what other people want and then trying to give it to them
If it's really what you got from it all, you never really listened to people. Don't make folks lose belief in your honesty (whether toward us or toward yourself) when the problems were already shared in plenty of posts, including mine:
>>10540626

People knew what they wanted, they bought into what you promised. You just never really delivered. Don't blame it on us now, that's quite bad of you and a great way to make people disappointed even more.

>>10541926
The problems with Eronomicon can be fixed but you refuse to do it. Kill the fucking 2 school limit and have spells be limited by just risk or corruption and spell/boon ratio someone wants will fix it and not leave out and invalidate over half the work you made.

There IS a problem and it's that instead of actual adressing it you just tell us that you said in advance there would be problems. But they CAN be fixed.

>>10541926
Mate, I wasn't in those threads where you talked about eronomicon nor did I see a poll about it. (must've been on holiday during it).
I understand you knew how much work it would take to make it good and you did warn a couple of people about it, but there's no reason to jump the gun and get rid of all suggestion.

>>10541990
Very likely this, I wrote in my earlier post that I voted on the basis of the spiel Tokhaar thrown in the very thread with the poll, promising a big CYOA taking into consideration one's fetishes and then providing a hefty number awesome choices in regards to one's preferences. But then he messed up in both different and related areas and that's where the shitstorm stems from - certainly it's not just from the CYOA's ideas, themes or any particular choice.

>>10541998
I'm fucking frustrated that hes refusing to fix the giant problem that ruins the whole thing. The point of the corruption was to balance out spells for drawbacks. What the fuck is the point of making something big and limiting it to a fucking fraction of what's there?

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>>10541681
Hey tokHaar I just want to let you know that i really enjoy Eronomicon. And of the three you made i know about, its probably my favorate one.

I liked how meta it was. The way it was kInda of out of your control like a RYOA but based around your own quirks and personality.

I also like how the schools have individual themes. with some being tempting for different reasons.

The only thing i ask is for more draw brack choices.

Good work!

>>10541681
I like you, I like your work and I apreciate that you make some of the best CYOAs in recent memory but I'm going to call out any mistakes or fuckups I see because holding back leaves a lower quality result. Nobody's trying to game the system, just help you make something better.

>>10541792

"Do it, taking taking other authors hard work and then adding minor stuff to it that makes it easier to get powers is not something every CYOa author is capable of and it requires true talent."

Domains is completely different form your spell system, the entire trait subsystem in the write is not present in your version, the number of fetishes you have (if at least 3) does not penalize your power (so people with very diverse or very specific tastes aren't shafted), and the drawbacks are minor or major curses that harm you rather than corruptions that force you to do things you would do/be already.

You're not a published author, selling copyrighted work on the marketplace, you're a shitposter on 4chan that has produced some good cyoa work in the past. Don't bitch when you fail to deliver, and some anon comes along and tries to make something that at least partially lives up to the CYOA you promised.

Holy fuck, Gol is still going full retard and whining about how we're wrong because Reddit likes him on /tg/.

>>10542344
And he will be called Raahkot. Tokhaar's(evil?)(good?) twin brother.

>>10542389
At this point, I don't even know if it's him for sure.

>>10542389
/tg/ actualy ruined Eronomicon because he wanted to balance it for people with less fetishes so went ahead and fuced it up into something that is not as great as it could be and ruins itself even though it self balances itself with the coruptions. He's shot himself and blames us when we try help.

>>10542344
>>10542426
He shall be Jaltok Gol.

>>10542344
>>10542426
>>10542503
More like JalYt Gol

>>10542594
It's still a lewd cyoa, so presumably he's still hard.

So "tok" is still viable for the name, since it means "hard".

>>10541792
reddit treats content creators much better. Which tends to turn them into lazy, entitled bitches who expect praise and upboats for every little thing they contribute.

>>10542731
And Reddit gives it to them.

>>10534194
>Lust is represented by purple and Pride by pink
MUH 'TISM! Basically unplayable, to be honest.

>>10541507
I really enjoy Eronomicon too. i dont get why some people are so rude to the author just because they don t like the way the Cyoa work.
Why don't just find an other Cyoa wich is more in your convenance instead of been an ahrse to someone who put time and effort on create someting?

i mean, their is a lot of Cyoa . why this one is so important to you ?

--(sorry for bad english. im not a native.)-- ^^

>>10542494
No, Tokhaar ruined Eronomicon. Don't try and put the blame on anyone but the guy who made the mistakes.

>>10543400
>im not a native
You're an underage ponyfag, more likely. The emoticon points to that too.

>>10543400
Criticism is not being rude.
Fuck off.

>>10543400
I don't have a problem with Lewdbook, but now you have gone and challenged me to be as rude as possible.
Challenge accepted you kike nigger faggot.

Tok is going to move to reddit full time, mark my words.

>>10543537
Hey, identity death is a perfectly good fetish.
Blue is best school anyway.

>>10543438
i would be stupid to deny that .
>>10543482
some criticism was not. but other was less critism than rudeness. Like how he but Not effort in it. how he ruined it .

>>10543537
That's fine. He's got our warnings. If he wants to go, it's his choice.

>>10543400
Rewrite author here. I'm rewriting it because it was a good idea, just poorly executed. The reason people are taunting Tok is because he has started taking criticism personally. For an author, being arrogant and needlessly defensive of your work will get you laughed at, especially since this is an imageboard and he is posting CYOAs for approval.

>>10543628
Yeah he fucked it up by trying to make it more accessable to people with less fetishes and fucked it up. 2 school limit fucking ruins it. That's just being honest.

>>10541277
>So you want none-lewd drawbacks in a lewd CYOa
Unironically yes. I know that's not the theme of Eromancer, but I'd love a CYOA where you have to pay for deviant stuff with the unsexiest possible drawbacks, like a pornographic version of that Spirit waifu CYOA.

Guys I think we broke Tokhaar's mind, and it's much less sexy than I imagined

>>10543967
You sadden me.

>>10543967
I told you that the original plan of gangbanging him until he can't live without our cocks and using that addiction to make him create CYOAs was a much better plan.

But nooooo, let's try giving him constructive criticism, that's what all the "how to" books say.

>>10543694
Personally, I'm more annoyed by the fact that a lot of the spells don't relate to the fetishes you get. Look at black, for example - you get one spell that covers every kind of waste production (and is arbitrarily distinct from the yellow spell that covers every kind of fluid production), one necrophilia spell, and one completely non-erotic murder spell, then a corruption spell (purple) a dream manipulation spell (blue or red), and a sensory modification/linking spell (a fun fetish that doesn't fall into any category). How does that fit with black fetishes? What about the black fetishes that don't get satisfied, like loli, incest, or guro? And all the corruptions also relate to those murderous aspects - why not forcing you to subsist on human waste, or giving you an evil twin who desperately wants to fuck you?

New thread: >>10544044

>>10544058
>New thread already
What?

>>10543628
>i would be stupid to deny that .
Yes, denying the truth is stupid.

>>10544066
1: I've made them even earlier in the past. 2: I don't trust any of you lot to make 'em properly (yet). 3: It's way past late over here, and there's no way the thread will survive through the night. 4: /trash/ in general moves faster than /d/ (don't think it's as fast as /tg/, but not sure).

Also, better safe than sorry.

>>10543400
I liked it too, for what it's worth. It's fun to experiment with the different builds and it's clear that a lot of effort was put into it. It might not be perfect, but it's worthwhile to say the least

(This is coming from a fan of the green magic)

>>10544043
In the rewrite, I'm trying to give the colors a more coherent theme:

Red: Dominance (power from dominance)
Orange: Transgression (power from overturning the natural order)
Yellow: Submission (power from serving the needs of others)
Green: Change (Power from transformation)
Blue: Arcanum (Lust mages focusing on "traditional" magic)
Indigo: The Abyss (a plane of infinite perversion)
Violet: Pure Lust (Ultra-focused lust mage)

Lograah Kot

>>10544254
I'd make blue "Impossibility," to keep it ero-focused. Maybe also a color for "Extremes" - that is, natural sexual things taken to the point where they become a focus, like big breasts, big muscles, lots of cum, impregnation, and so on. Kind of like the existing yellow, but more coherent.

>>10544254
>rainbow colours
Don't.

>>10534194

yellow: 4
green: 0
blue: 5
purple: 0
pink: 4
red: 2
black: 1
16 mana
blue eromancy (primary): summon person (upgraded), spiritual possession (upgraded)
yellow eromancy (secondary): charm (upgraded)
mana regen: mana potion
boons: immortality, discrete spellcasting
corruption: magic feedback, sexy girl

was bummed out that I didn't have enough fetishes to take the upgraded planeswalker boon, but then I realized with upgraded summon person I can cut out the middle man and simply summon all of my waifus to me without the hassle of leaving my home!

not a huge fan of gender swapping (at least, not a fan of it being ME who is gender swapped), but I'll just use my possession abilities to steal men's bodies whenever I miss having a dick.

to regen most of my mana it'd take ~55 fluid ounces of sexual liquids, which is an absurd amount to consume regularly, but if my understanding of tokhaar's spell mechanics work w/r/t summoning fictional characters sans powers is correct, I should be able to summon slime girls who can easily provide the fluids I need and in a form that is more like drinking water than slimy mucus.

>>10544152
Your doesn't have CYOA in the subject.

>>10544254
Where does loli magic go?

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>>10544254
>>10542344
TokHaar here, if you want my name so fucking bad, take it! I quit!

>>10544501
Hell.

>>10544684
Post it on /tg/ with your trip and I'll believe it.