/cyoag/ - CYOA General

go hog wild?

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Whatcha gonna pick, anon?

You ARE an author, right?

How much lore is too much lore in cyoa? Is it better to leave things vague or to give it a large and interesting history.

Is it wrong to make all waifus suffering?

>>54440770
Everyone loves lore, that's why stuff like Pokemon Personified is popular.

Nobody likes the waifus being suffering, that's why Pokemon Personified has had shitstorms about the ones who are.

>>54440116
>Augmentations
Cyber Eyes (-15)
Augmented Smell (-5)
Voice Modulator (-5)
Artificial Blood (-10)
Hypergrowth Hormone (-25)
Accessible Memory (-5)
Upload Knowledge (Seduction) (-5)
Assisted Aiming (-10)
AI Helper (-10)
Fast Thought (-10)

Manlets BTFO, I am super-Chad. Super-smart, able to detect the slightest changes in bloodflow and body language to detect changes in arousal, and tall and muscular as fuck.

Also, when the shit hits the fan, I'm an aimbot with an LMG. GG.

Companions:
Viper
Nyla

Picking the CYOA's only waifus, of course.

Missions:
Manhunt
Assassination
Rescue

These seem to be the missions that play to my team's strengths.

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>>54440833

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>>54440843

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>>54440846

>>54440851
for what purpose

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>>54440857

>>54440851
Y'know, anon, there's no point to posting that thing anymore.

>>54440770
Lore is great as long as it doesn't get too much in the way of the actual choices.

>>54440781
I like waifus being suffering as long as it feels organic to their situation and isn't just tacked on.

>>54440912
'Nobody' is a hyperbole senpai. You understand what I meant.

>>54440921
Right, but I was hoping to provide support for at least a niche audience if suffering waifus is what he wants to write.

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>>54440781
>Pokemon Personified is popular
Is it? Seems more like a niche cyoa.

>>54441100
It has consumed multiple threads in discussion over it, so yes.

>>54440758
>You ARE an author, right?
Soon to be author, i hope that counts.

>Invincible guardian of ocular ability
>Essential collection of lazy comforts
>Fetishy undergarments of reliable attractiveness
>Silky gloves of pleasurable content creation
>Virtual assistant of browsing and searching
>Goo maid of non-sexual cleaniness

With this i will become the best author in /cyoag/ Why this can't be real?

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>>54440642
>megacorporation cyoa still not finished

It's not the waiting that's the hardest part, it's accepting all that lost profit. All those lost sales.

>>54441238
make it yourself you filthy jew

I cannot wait for Time Of Troubles 2 to be completed so that I can finally abandon the Magical Realm World that is cyoa general.

>>54441434
You'll be back once you're done with your build.

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>>54441100
>Those digits
>tfw Pokemon Personified will never be made into a game.
>tfw even if it did a lot of the lore would be omitted.
It would've been good as a party based ARPG.

>>54441434
I can't wait to be dissapointed when I can't turn russian boys into my cumsluts once again. So cruel.

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Was this index ever finished?

>>54441458
No, thankfully I'm not you.
>>54441526
Why don't you make a russian mob cyoa like that?

>>54441544
Missing a lot of old creators on this

>>54441544
whats the criteria for making it onto the list?

>>54441621
Some new ones too

>>54441623
Sucking a lot of dick.

>>54440846
how big are the ships, battleship in particular?

>get back to working on a cyoa after half a year
>find out I deleted all the text ages ago

I think that does it in. I needed only one more category and I doubt I can find the motivation to do those 4k words again.

>>54440758
>what're you gonna pick
Already posted my choices
>you are an author right?
Technically yes but it's been a while.

>>54441100
>>54441109
A niche CYOA with a loud if small player base

>>54441714
Dunno, big enough. Whatever makes sense.
Smallest you walk walk around in like a large house
Medium takes a little while to get to places, like walking around your neighborhood
Large taking hours to move from one end to the other.

>>54441756
Why did you ...

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>>54440642
>cyoa has magic
>no spell to conjure frens

>>54441756
>bullied by your past self
how low can you get...

>>54441993
Have you considered the art of Necromancy[/Spoiler]?

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>>54442036
Heretic! Necromancer will never have frens!

>>54441621
>>54441651
Who. Post their stuff.

>>54441623
Post work with a name it can be categorized by but you don't have to namefag. I usually only create a folder if the person's made 2 or more coyas.

There are a lot of folders that don't have an author name attached that I'm still sorting and typing up an index/catalog to. When it's done I'll release a mega link to the whole folder set for people to download.

>>54441544
Damn.
We have more creators than I thought.

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>>54441544
>QuietAnon's cyoas

It still hurts.

>>54442217
who?

>>54436253
As I had said a bit earlier, I hadn't really intended pocket dimension for multiplayer, BUT I certainly didn't say that in the CYOA so I can't hold it against you. I think it would only really be a big problem if you were using time dilation, which you did not select.

However, the major problem with your build is that companions don't get "fates". It says you can buy upgrades for companions, but fates are not upgrades. So, your trick of halving the costs of the physical upgrades twice will not work. Sorry. Companions already have all powers at discount; discounting them twice is absurd.

>>54436619
That's the point of CYOAs, anon, to slowly degrade your faith in your own humanity!

>>54436756
Will be updated as well. Not before next week.

>>54439256
Looks good to me!

Which cyoa has the best grim reapers? Alternatively, which cyoa features the best afterlife?

>>54442626
Why would you want to be a grim reaper?

>>54442626
Pokemon Personified has both. Smert is best waifu and the afterlife isn't bad: Your soul either gets eaten, stays in the underworld, gets tossed back in the lifestream and reused for something else, you become a Ghost, or you go to heaven.

>>54442036
>Necromancy
>Not necRomancy

>>54442561
>G-man companion gets nerfed
Thank god. i already have to respec some of my magics to imbue master of motion major, and imbue compulsion major, on my next incarnations to deal with the guy.

>>54442935
Don't get too excited; it's not ultimately going to lose him *that* much.

>>54442978
Yeah, But everything counts when dealing with him.

>>54440843
>TRAVERLLER

>>54441801
>>54441109
>>54441100
I just wish I could make a build for it. Without autistic knowledge of pokemon I'm pretty much incapable of getting past the first steps.

>>54443231
>Without autistic knowledge of pokemon
More numbers is always better

>>54443231
>Without autistic knowledge of pokemon.
Unless you're a min-max fag, but even then: >>54443315

The only time autistic knowledge for pokemon comes in handy is when there is references to events from pokemon in there (Like Amew being the Mew who was experimented on to give birth to Mewtwo.)

>>54443405
I'm still mad that the only build I bothered making got fucked because hypnosis isn't listed in the moves.

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>>54441238
I'm doing demonology now, not actively working on megacorp because I'm out of inspiration for a bit.
But it's playable in its current incarnation.

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>>54443466

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>>54443477

>>54443405
You have to know what ALL the moves and abilities do and how they interact. You have to know typing, which ones are common and which are shit, and you need to know how the stats work and how much/what is worth investing in. Just reading through the near 1000 moves in the games is too much, but having some kind of understanding of which ones are actually decent is beyond me.

The alternative of course is just to look up some kind of known broken/exploit build and copy that, but that instantly takes all the fun out of it.

>>54443503
Im not so sure about that because i sweeped with a whimsicott

>>54443466
Don't suppose you have the picture for UniCo to share?

Also, between 5, 4 and 3, who has claim of Polynesia?
I'd think 5 as they have Micronesia and Melanesia also but you kind of cut out the entire Pacific Ocean.

>>54443231
Where is this Pokemon Personified you speak of?

>>54443640
Go back a few threads, somebody dumped all ~37 pages at the end of one of them.

>>54443675
Sounds like it'd be easier to just make it a pdf...

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>>54443675
>~37 pages
And I thought Royal Revival was getting rather long (if still good) at 9.

>>54443594
I don't have the unico picture anymore.
It used to be one of the first results for shaman I think.
Polynesia is iffy. You can take it as a part of 20, The Free Country or imagine it as contested territory.

>>54443703
Italics, the guy who made Pokemon Personified made another cyoa that was around 50 pages long and when they put a pdf version it was 300 pages long.

>>54440662
you need to make a hog cyoa first

>>54444005
I still can not choose anything less than all the options

>>54444005
This seems like it should have more combination/expansion things like at the bottom.

>>54443428
It's a support move, dummy.

>>54443993
>Class
Stuffed, Vanilla, Warthog, Wild Boar
>Skills
Be Cute, Locate Truffle, Charge, Squeal, Dig, Fly, Go Wild, Be Delicious
>Accessories
>Companions
Piglette, Babe, Pumbaa, Twrch Trwyth, Bebop, Snowball
>Waifus
Miss Piggy, Petunia Pig, Anime girl with one of those weird nose hook things who is called "breeding sow" in the dialogue, Zhu

Goddamn, I have so much more respect now for CYOA authors who write up many character descriptions for their CYOAs.

I'm at 27 of 35, and trying to come up with distinct personalities and traits is fucking exhausting.

>>54444005
No life extension?

>>54444237
>I'm at 27 of 35,
That is a really significant undertaking. Any reason you settled on 35?

>>54444248
The author said something about regeneration or shaoeshifting doing the trick

>>54444295
So many pretty pictures...

>>54444349
How do you get this mad over something as insignificant as it was?

>>54444366
Attention whores get what attention whores deserve.

>>54444349
Did we ever determine if this was legit?

>>54444163
Yeah? Got any ideas?

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You guys remember that Linkin Park guy who offed himself. I made a couple references too the "Got soo far but in the end it doesn't even matter" Not too long ago in a cyoa and in a comment. Spoopy shit right?

>>54443466
This anon >>54444248 just gave an idea. You were looking for some nice things the owners of a megacorp could get for themselves? Why not the good old life extension treatment? Only a high rep can get you into those clubs that offer it.

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>>54444406

>>54444182
>Wild Boar
I'm badass
>Locate Truffle
Makes a pretty penny
>Bebop
I don't know who this is, but I don't like the other choices.
>Anime Girl

>>54443466
how is demonology going by the way?

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>>54444374
And I deserve nothing less than your unconditional love!

>>54444406
I blame his suicide on Gaythony Mantano. May screaming emo nu-metal meme man RIP in piece; it may be trash, but this shit was my middle school and Runescape days.

>>54442561
>However, the major problem with your build is that companions don't get "fates". It says you can buy upgrades for companions, but fates are not upgrades. So, your trick of halving the costs of the physical upgrades twice will not work. Sorry. Companions already have all powers at discount; discounting them twice is absurd.

Ok, my bad. Will update my build.

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>>54444503
>Bebop

>>54444406
>Linkin Park guy who offed himself
I don't want to an ass, but did this really come as a surprise to anyone?

>>54443490
This is too complicated to actually play, I don't know what half my points do

>>54444686
I don't mean to be an ass, but why should I care about some celebrity offing themselves anyway? Plenty of people off themselves every day and I don't care about them either.

>>54444418
That's a good one. But what I really need is more followers.
Also, a more interesting bonus system for business focuses.

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>cyoa has warriors and mages
>mages are objectively stronger

>>54444848
That's because magic is better than swords, anon. It's just a fact.

>>54444747
To be fair, I react the same way to every death I hear about. I can't speak for everyone, but the only reason I mention "celebrity" deaths in public is that others are aware of who I'm talking about.

My sister's friend died last week because he decided to drive a motorcycle at night while drunk, without a helmet.
I have no strong feelings on the subject, just a minor morbid fascination at how dumb people can be, myself included.

>>54444848
I'll never understand why people don't choose both.

>>54444951
Because specialisation always trumps master-of-none except in well-designed games.

>>54444532
But SDA, my love is worthless.
The best I can give you is the time it took to type this post.

>>54444969
>except in well-designed games

Well, yeah. But why have a game, when you can have a CYOA and make up everything beyond the core idea of what's happening?

>>54444937
>>54444747
>>54444686
Kill each other. Then kill yourselves.

>>54445087
Because CYOAs can be badly designed, and often are.
When they say "if you purchase this ability twice then you get MASTERY" you basically have to pick it twice otherwise it's wasted points.

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Repost and rebuild for the RP world.

>G-Man
>Immortal Wanderer (90)
>Tourist (70)
>Genius Level 3 (60)
>Memory of Ages (55)
>Polyglot (55)
>Economist (50)
>Mage Eye (48)
>All Physical Stats Level 0 (48)
>Master of Motion Major (38)
>Compulsion Minor (33)
>Disjunction Major (23)
>Pocket Dimension (18)
>Running Water and Toiletries (17)
>Chrono Computer with games and Book of Knowledge(11)
>Unpleasant Visage (16)
>Weak (21)
>RP World (31)
>Quests: Historian, Singularity, Free & Sustainable

"Rise and shine, Mister Freeman. Rise and... shine. Not that I... wish to imply you have been sleeping on the job. No one is more deserving of a rest, and all the effort in the world would have gone to waste until... well, let's just say your hour has... come again. The right man in the wrong place can make all the difference in the world. So, wake up, Mister Freeman. Wake up and... smell the ashes."

>Companion: Gordon Freeman (29)
>Genius Level 2 (27.5)
>Memory of Ages Level 2 (26.25)
>Mage Eye (25.75)
>Strength & Speed Level 3 (21.75)
>Impervious Level 3 (12.75)
>Regeneration Level 2 (9.75)
>Endurance Level 2 (5.75)
>Personal Omni-Wear for both (4.75)
> Omni-Godslayer for both (2.25)
>Iron Gut (1.25)
>Non Reactor (0.25)

"You've been playing too much Half Life Anon."

>>54442561
This better? I love the creature comforts, security, theme, and internet the pocket dimension provides, but if its too problematic I can always replace it with Homeland.

>>54442935
>>54443045
I'm sorry to say that the nerfbat was quite... forgiving to Mr. Freeman.

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>>54444848
yet another reason why monster hunter will always be the best designed CYOA

>>54445112
Found the Stinking Bark fan.

Vote on which Superhero CYOA you'd rather see, Marvel or DC: https://strawpoll.com/kh39f58d

>>54445466
Which universe though? What time period?

>>54445513
Ideally I'd include elements of all major alternate universes and time periods within the publication. Power levels would probably be closer to modern than classic, since there's better art for modern stuff.

>>54445466
I want SJW Marvel.

>>54445534
I can accept that. Cast my vote.

>>54445350
Does a combination of Monster Within and a Phoenix soul allow you to reincarnate once a year?

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>>54445466
>capeshit
>western capeshit at that

>>54445546
Highly, highly unlikely. Not from me, at least.

>>54445534
As, I think it'd be neat to lean into the pulpy golden age and silver age aesthetic. Sort of like the Laser Eye War. Still, it's understandable because it'd take a lot of extra work.

>>54445561
yes it does. It says you can use that monster's unique ability, and that is how it manifests

>>54445466
Why not make your own super hero universe like OPM, BnH, DC, and Marvel and allow us to become our own heroes or villains within your lore and interesting world?

>>54445169
Only problem remaining is that companions explicitly cannot buy items. They can use items you pay for, but you can't pay half price for items by having companions buy them for you. Sorry for not catching that first time around.

And I don't think the pocket dimension is that big a deal, especially without the flexible entrance or time dilation.

>>54445627
Because that's a lot more work, and I'm looking for a fairly easy project because I'm out of practice.

>>54445631
Oh, wait, my bad! They are half price because you are Tourist. Looks good, in that case.

>>54445350
Somehow when I set up a build for this, I ended up with almost totally equal stats.

Noble
1 Strength
2 Defense
3 Agility
2 Intelligence
4 Skill

chose +1 Skill Point

Skills
Tempered
Toughness +1 Defense
Martial Arts +1 Skill
Willpower
Flurry +1 Skill
Athletics +1 Agility
Enhanced +1 Strength
Shockwaves +1 Strength

Finesse +1 Intelligence

One with Nature +1 Defense
Bloodlust +1 Strength

Bladed Arms +1 Skill
Ancient Weapon +1 Skill
Enchantment +1 Intelligence

Indomitable +1 Strength
Blessed +1 Defense
Recall +1 Intelligence
Pocketing +1 Agility
Demonic

Stat total
5 Strength
5 Defense
5 Agility
5 Intelligence
8 Skill

Underground Ruins 3 Skull 45 Tribute Points
Ancient Mountains 4 Skull 50 Tribute Points

Physiology -5 TP
Age -5 TP
Gender -5 TP
Beauty -5 TP

Forge -10 TP
Market -10 TP
Healing -5 TP
Training -5 TP
Map -5 TP
Hot Springs -5 TP
Inn -10 TP
Club -5 TP
Bounty -5 TP
Scavenging -5 TP
Alchemy -10 TP

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>>54445466
I vote for Boku no Hero!

>>54445631
>Only problem remaining is that companions explicitly cannot buy items. They can use items you pay for, but you can't pay half price for items by having companions buy them for you. Sorry for not catching that first time around.

I'm the one buying it. The discount exists because I have the Tourist fate. The companion is the one who puts them to use, so they are listed under him.

>>54445726
There's already a CYOA of that.

>>54445744
>>54445663
Sorry, should have tagged you with this.

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>>54445534
So stuff like this?

>>54445760
Where?!

>>54444512
Only the djinn page left. Got all the demons, still need to give them stats and flavortext.

>>54445781
That's post-modern. I don't acknowledge its existence.

>>54445804
I dunno, I'm not into the show, so I never saved it. I've seen it come up from time to time, though.

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>>54445466
neither desu

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Promised to make a tl;dr version, but now I'm not sure if it's needed. Are there any people who tl;dr'd this but want to read a shorter waifu picker based on something else?

>>54445856
I just need more Philip and Thomas in my life.

>>54445690
what a boring cyoa, pls stop

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>>54444733
Your total size is the combined size of all the companies you create. Every company exists out of brands of certain sizes. Every brand dedicates its size to peddling certain products.

With every business you choose in what territories it does business, this comes with security or law costs (having to invest in mercs or laywers).
With every brand you choose its character and attitude, this, combined with the chosen territory lands it with a reach score and a name score. (how many people know you and how much they appreciate you)
With every product you choose a market and sector it resides in. This, combined with the Name and Reach score of the parent brand decide how much money the product makes you.
Easy as pie.

So, I downloaded all >1000 CYOAs in the archive and I honestly don't feel like working through all of them. Could anyone recommend some favorites?

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>>54446067
>downloaded all
Nigger, you have fucked up.

>>54446067
Now upload them all to a single folder so I don't have to download them separately like an autist.

>>54446089
Thanks for the (you), but I still want an answer.

>>54446112
Just use a download manager, took me five clicks and three hours.

>>54445726
... well, that's a fetish.

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>>54445856
fug forgot to post the rest

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>>54445466
>enter Marvel/DC universe
>receive superpowers
>try to become a superhero
>realize all other superheroes look like tall, muscular models
>become known as that one ugly superhero by comparison
>no matter how many people you save, none of them truly admire or love you like they would another superhero

>>54446398
There actually are fat superheroes. One example is a hero named Bueno Excellente.

Wasn't there a shortstack witch cyoa?

>>54446406
>Bueno Excellente
>hero

Bueno...

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>>54446414
Yep.

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>>54446406
>become superhero
>just a normal guy trying to save people
>except you're not a male model
>people assume you're some sort of pervert or villain in disguise
>your entire character is just one big joke

I think I'd rather become a supervillain and regurgitate acid into the faces of pretty people.

>>54446572
>not taking Pig God from One-Punch Man's way out of it
Say what you want about Jap fiction, but it was one alternative.

>>54446398
This is why you become a supervillain (or super"villain"), anon -- you can hide your figure under armor and spikes and do whatever pleases you without concern for public opinion. You can even still save people and stop crime, just do it with a bad attitude.

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Had to stop at 32, or I might have gone insane. It also seemed a good place since that just fit into three images. I will probably revisit this after some feedback, and add a fourth page once I have a better feel for what is "missing" in terms of options. I'm sorry if you were looking forward to one of the three images from before that did not end up making the cut.

Image 1 of 3.

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>>54446660
(2/3)

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>>54446385

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>>54446660
>>54446673
(3/3)

>>54446624
That sounds pretty fun.

>>54446686
The most appreciated feedback would be to know if any of the descriptions are *particularly* unappealing. Ideally most of them should have something that makes you consider them as an option.

>>54445799
If I merge Divine Diva, Bitch Queen, Drider Queen and Soul Split, do I become the most insufferable individual in existence?

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>>54445466
>Marvel or DC

>>54446660
Can I have 3 companions be my mentor+lover+friend?

>>54446660
I don't see why you felt the need to mention Ciara Ni Riain's sexual experience when nobody else that I've read does. It comes across like an unnecessary detail and really stands out. Especially since it's not really part of her personality.

I generally think it's a bad idea design wise, it's like, you go on your first date with a girl, is she going to tell you about how much sex she's had before/mention her exes? It's just not the sort of thing that comes up.

>>54445169
>I'm sorry to say that the nerfbat was quite... forgiving to Mr. Freeman
Oh well, i guess i had put too many hopes in to it. I will be the one who wins in the end though

>>54446796
Again, because I want an easy project.

>>54446660
The girls don't really appeal to me, I see a lot of a pacifist vs. bitch dichotomy, and I'm neither submissive nor the type to adhere to some strict moral guideline.

>>54446823
You have one primary mentor, one primary lover, one primary friend. You can pick one person to be BOTH your mentor and lover, but you can't say ALL THREE ARE MY LOVER.

I mean, you're welcome to try to seduce multiple people, but only one is fated to fall in love with you.

>>54446827
It's a fair point. I was trying to express that, while traveling around, she is actively finding men/women and taking them to bed for casual sex. The reason I don't mention it for anyone else is that for the others you don't *know* whether they are a virgin or not. You have to ask them. For her, it's obvious. Does that make sense?

>>54446827
Not the author, that just read to me as being part and parcel of her YOLO (and not for long) attitude... which I suppose means it could probably be assumed from the general facts of her outlook.

>>54446876
Yo, can I give you some minor critiques I have for your Altering History CYOA? I really like the premise, but I have two significant hang-ups with it.

>>54446686
>>54446709
I can tell you Nina isn't going to be a popular one. Nobody likes a girl that's going to flirt with and seduce other men.

>>54446876
But I can't have a polygamous fated love relationship?

>>54446914
I laughed, only because can you imagine me posting *anything* here if I wasn't open to critique? But yes, I'm always open to improve the things I make.

>>54446870
Can I ask which ones you view as a "bitch"? The only ones designed to be somewhat bitchy are Evet (noble alchemist) and Siga (Mageslayer)

>>54446943
The first is that "The Dustbin of History" drawback automatically makes most of the quests impossible since they require you to be well known. A few of them don't, but it severely limits you, far more than the 10 or 15 points it gives. It should either give more points, or have a slower effect, to enable you to complete the quests before being forgotten.

The second is that the quest for making an eternal empire cannot be applied to the Roman Empire, which only came into being in 500 BC, and thus cannot exist for 3000 years by the present day. That's more of a personal nitpick, since I went in with the intention of making the Roman Empire eternal before I ever noticed the quest, but I was disappointed I couldn't pick up that quest because the Roman Empire started 500 years too late.

>>54446916
Eh i honestly don't care that much i already plan on romancing Abeta Ravencaller though but maybe i choose her as friend

>>54446916
To be fair, it doesn't say she seduces anyone. The only one that would fit the typical "slut" pejorative would be Ciara, in my opinion.

>>54446942
Not unless you channel Sartre. I have no moral objection to polygamy, but it is not the norm on this world. You'll have to work for it. Certain characters may be more open to the idea than others; infer from personality.

>>54441985
Accidentally, of course. Had the stuff in some random file and overwrote it when I had a batch of files automatically generated in that directory.

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>>54446876
>Does that make sense?
It makes sense, but it displays how she's a really bad character for a waifu. You don't make someone who is actively slutty and fucking as many people as possible with you around a waifu. That's pretty much offputting to, well, basically everyone, concerned with virginity or not. You should really rethink that personality trait.

>>54447002
>To be fair, it doesn't say she seduces anyone
She uses her looks to get what she wants, which is seduction. Don't do the semantics thing.

>>54446660
>>54446673
>>54446686
>>54446709

Ciaria isn't great as a non-mentor because of her live fast, die young nature -- at least that stood out to me. Death is an occupational hazard for mentors though

I don't mind Nina, she's not a Pure Waifu in attitude but she seems like she'd be a kind of kickass friend or OK mentor. Maybe even lover, knowing you'd be the only real target of her affections.

The zealots (Githiue, Siga and kiiiinda Dukon) don't appeal to me, BUT I know full well that's a personal issue, not an issue with them.

>>54446673
>>54446827
>>54446916
Why are men so obsessed with the purity of girls?

Meanwhile girls really don't care all that much. In this cyoa for example Edramir is my favourite even more so because he's such a fuckboy. The idea of him abandoning that lifestyle and all the other women to love only me makes me quiver.

>>54446943
Sulvora, unflinching nature fanatic, Lei is coldhearted and bitchy, Evala is arrogant and moody, Cilia is borderline personality disorder, Lothienye hates humans, Githiue is a religious fanatic, Nina is arrogant and manipulative, and Evet is an arrogant noble that treats you like shit.

>>54447004
She's fine. Some people like that kind of thing.

>>54447080
I've never met a single woman that likes a guy talking about his exes or bragging about his sexcapades before he met her. That's a real quick way to make her act jealous and pissy.

>>54447080
>Why are men so obsessed with the purity of girls?
Lots of reasons, but paternity is is the main one. Normal men don't want to invest in another man's child.

>>54447127
No, not after you start dating. Then it's a huge red flag. But the knowledge you stole away a man from all those sluts and now he's devoted to you is A+. Taming the playboy is the best trope out there.

>>54446686
>>54446673
>>54446660
None of these stand out to me as poor choices or badly written. I'd take Clara Ni Riain as my lover, Wulfe Bearskinner as my mentor (can I learn her ability to steal the power of my kills?), and then friend is a hard choice between Nina Milas and Kathil Songweaver. I'd probably go with Kathil just because she fits in better with the band I'm building.

>>54447170
You read to me like one of /tg/s anons talking about their genderswap fetish and related subfetishes than an actual woman, so I'm going to take everything you say with a big pile of salt.

Also you criticizing other women for being sluts kinda echoes the male attitude, don't you think? Doesn't put you in a place to judge it.

>>54446985
I'm not particularly moved on the first point. Drawbacks are supposed to make certain things hard, but I will give it another look.

I do take your second point very well, though, and will reconfigure that one slightly in the next update so that the Roman Empire can qualify, if expansive enough.

>>54447004
So perhaps she makes a better friend than a waifu? One of the reasons I made all characters from the same pool is so that I don't have to make everyone ideal waifu material. I appreciate the input on that point, though. As evidenced by other responses, though, some people are okay with it. My hope is to have a very broad range of appeal, personality wise.

>>54447021
As you like. She would certainly use her body to distract a guard. I don't view that as "seduction", but as you say, it's just semantics.

>>54447073
Excellent input; thank you.

>>54447107
With respect, I think you are greatly exaggerating the traits that I wrote them with. I don't say that you can't interpret them that way, in their worst light, but they do not have to be interpreted that way by any means.

>>54447201
>>54447113
One of the worst things about criticism here is always the lying devil's advocates. You KNOW you just want to encourage him and don't like the characters or want to share the girl with a dozen other guys. But you do it because of his feelies.

>>54447222
>they do not have to be interpreted that way
All I'm doing out is pointing those traits out, not reinterpreting them. Characters that expect you to bow and scrape, and who expect you to suck up to their religion, people who actively ARE bitchy to others, are not nice people no matter how you slice it.

>>54447226
What the fuck are you even talking about? You're so stuck up your own ass that people's opinions get classified as lies?

>>54447226
I'm not lying. I've seen anons say they like experienced women. Let them have their girl.

>>54447222
>So perhaps she makes a better friend than a waifu?
They're all meant to work as waifus, so I don't think this instantly dismisses the criticism.

>>54447226
None of the girls are going to be shared if taken as the lover. Nina sounds like a cocktease, not a slut, and Clara explicitly is stated as being monogamous for the right person. There are problems with a lot of the characters, but I don't see them as being overbearing. I'm perfectly thrilled with my fem-Viking warband.

>>54447253
Well, for one example, you took a character that wants you to refer to her as "Lady", and interpreted that as "bow and scrape". That's not written there. For another example, you took a character who has a duty to eliminate unnatural menaces and be a diplomatic envoy "Sulvora", and made her an "unflinching nature fanatic". Also not written there.

>>54446673
Mentor; Tige Ealhsin
Wind martial arts? Hell Yah!
Thou I take it I haft to travel to the Monasteries to learn everything?
Lover; Nina Milas
Lover is a personal taste thing, So long as she's loyal I don't care if she flaunts her bod.
Friend, Edramir dorwine
Hi's talents I think will help this awkward group.
And he reminds me of a friend of mine.

>>54447277
They're all meant to work as waifus/husbandos for some-anon, not for every-anon.

>>54447222
Much appreciated. I could live without the points from Dustbin if I could have my Eternal Roman Empire.

>>54447222
>>54447277
Fucking enter button. To continue, in regards to her as a friend, someone spending all their time chasing ass is going to distract from whatever we're doing, eat up our supplies, and generally waste tons of time and put us all at risk by bringing strange people along. She'd make a very bad friend.

You asked if anyone thought an option was completely anathema and had nothing you'd want, and that's Ciara. Hell I honestly think all of the girls are boring. I agree that finding a woman who A) Isn't going to talk down to me B) Isn't way too lawful good or C) Isn't a turbo slut is pretty hard in this CYOA, it limits it to one or two barebones choices.

And regarding people saying they like her, they only piped up after I complained. Someone always does that to any complaint in this thread. Wouldn't put any stock in them.

>>54447348
>I need these three ultra specific character traits
>People only spoke up when I acted like a retard

>>54447291
Expecting to be referred to by an honorific title isn't something people just do, it's something you insist on because you care about status. That you place yourself above and superior to the person who you are demanding call you by that title. So yes, she is expecting you to bow and scrape and adhere to etiquette... etiquette of an inferior towards their superior.

>>54447348
Evala. Imindis. Lei. Three on the first page who don't have those three problems. They have their own quirks, but none of them are snooty, slutty, or lawful good.

>>54447383
I wasn't aware 'not an asshole' and 'not religious' was somehow a rare and super specific trait. What universe do you come from?

>>54447421
Evala, the person who only cares about her research and who experiences moodswings? Lei, the girl who is prickly towards you and doesn't care about other people's suffering? Who only cares about herself?

Yeah no, come off it anon.

>>54447348
Please do not misunderstand, I appreciate the criticism; an echo-chamber is not helpful in improving works. That doesn't mean I will agree with or adopt it all.

Can I ask who you consider the "bare-bone choices"? I'm just trying to get a read on how they are interpreted, because there are not many intended to be the kind to "talk down". The noble is certainly one of them.

As far as putting stock in people wanting more experienced women, I do not need input here to assure me of that reality. So, really, whether or not that particular anon is lying is immaterial (though I think it a bit crude to assume someone's opinion is a lie because you don't agree with it).

My CYOA is intended to create a broad range of appeal in personalities, not to have a large number of choices that appeal to everyone. I find the latter dull. Criticism is helpful, though, in that it helps me see whether there are gaps in personality.

In editing this, I'm far more likely (and almost certainly will) add more options to increase range of appeal, than edit those that don't appeal to your particular sensibilities.

>>54447474
I didn't say they were good, I said they didn't have the extremely specific problems you mentioned. You're moving the goalposts.

>>54446660
It could just be because I'm in a good mood today, but I actually like pretty much all of these companions. Usually, when I go through a companion list people are disqualified for being more trouble than they're worth, having characteristics that clash with my character, or being an inferior version of another companion. I could see myself enjoying a journey with any of them.

My top three choices, at the moment, would probably be Imindis Hornmarked, Mumbali, and Nina Milis. I like Lady Evet too, gotta love alchemists.

I think your art choice does a lot to make them more appealing and unique too.

>>54447474
>Evala, the person who only cares about her research
>Description of Evala: "...not without compassion, and certainly not without care for her friends..."
Given this deliberate dismissal of description, I don't think there is much I can do to please you, anon, without completely eliminating any hint of negative personality traits.

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Could I request source for this image? I can't find it, even after cutting it out and reverse searching.

It's from this CYOA:
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>>54447348
People typically only voice their complaints, though. The people who like things the way they are either post a build and get along their way or don't post at all until someone who disagrees with their opinions comes along. Furthermore, pessimists like you tend to amplify negatives for no good reason, like "they're all turbosluts."

>>54447474
Not an asshole and not religious eliminate a good 90% of this world, yourself included.

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>>54444349
RIP Tok, you were the greatest lewd author known to /d. We shall always remember you and honor your memory by re-posting the legacy you left behind. A titan has fallen, a god has died, a hero has quit, but the stories you left behind shall always be remembered.

>>54447487
>Two barebones choices
Imindis and Sheli. I don't share any of the first one's interests, but her only major negative is the confidence issues. Sheli is alright enough. Core problem is that 2 out of 16? (I didn't count the girls but I know it's 32 total) isn't a very good choice spread for any individual and they still don't have anything that really 'clicks' and makes me want to imagine hanging out with these people.

>>54447497
But they do have the problems I mentioned. They're assholes.

>>54447576
I don't care if she appeals to me in particular, I'm countering the idea that she's not bitchy. First part of that text reads like an excuse and the second isn't exactly endearing (especially since it goes on to explain what her attitude is going ot be like to you at first.)

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>>54447662
1) They're not, and other people have already mentioned why you're completely unreasonable so I'll leave it at that.

2) You didn't ask for non-assholes. You said not lawful good, wouldn't talk down to you, and aren't turbosluts. Condescension is not the same as being an asshole in general; nothing indicates even the assholes would act poorly towards their friend/lover/student.

>>54447577
I rarely save the images from my cyoas...
Sorry anon.

>>54446709
Githuiue sounds like she wouldn't be very fun to travel with. Being unwilling to accept anything outside of your religion is a recipe for really aggravating conflicts.

Lothienye isn't very appealing either, mainly because from the way she is written it seems like she's really difficult to connect to. Anger "when she sees the slightest sign of nature being despoiled" makes her sound like a fairly unpleasant person to be around just because there are probably going to be a lot of things that set her off. Also, her disinterest even in more artistic works like storytelling or music if they happen to be manmade makes her seem kind of dull.

>>54447201
Thanks for the build. Yeah, the idea is that you have the *potential* to learn any of the skills, so Wulfe can definitely teach you those secrets.

>>54447306
Tige could teach you a lot, but if you wanted to be a true master, yeah, the Monasteries would be your best bet. As far as Lovers go, any Lover you choose will be loyal to you. And dear Edramir will definitely bring laughter to the group.

>>54447572
Very, very nice to hear, anon. Thank you.

>>54447662
I don't think this CYOA is going to be for you, anon. I apologize. I can't help but see your criticisms as inflating negative personality traits of flawed individuals. And I know you disagree, and I respect that, but I don't think we're going to reach a point of agreement. When I write something positive about a character, you say it is "an excuse". I do appreciate you taking the time to give input, though. With a little luck the fourth page will include some that have more appeal for you, but they will all have flaws.

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>>54443466
Inheritance
- Size 100
- Connections 20

>Factions
Sancto Domini
Keiretsu
>Cultures
- Loyalty
- Leadership (Employees are trained not just to be followers but to be leaders, and are encouraged to train those below them the same. This makes them highly robust to both change and crisis as every leader lost can allways be replaced by those blow him.)

>Head office
Area 3. Free Radical sports bionics US (size 20)
- Demo: Young people
- Image: Rebellious
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Medicine
>Subcompanies
Area 3. Razera military industries US (size 20)
- Demo: Buiseness-to-Government (+10)
- Image: Efficiant
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Transportation
Area 3. Razera sports cars US (size 5)
- Demo: Rich people
- Image: Innovative (+10)
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Transportation
Area 2. Free Radical sports bionics Europe (size 20)
- Demo: Young people
- Image: Rebellious
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Medicine
Area 2. DEES sports drinks Europe (size 15)
- Demo: Young people
- Image: Innovative
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Sports,
Area 2. Razera military industries UK (size 10)
- Demo: Buiseness-to-Government
- Image: Efficiant (+5)
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Transportation
Area 5. Razera sports sports cars AUS (size 10)
- Demo: Singles (+5)
- Image: Innovative
- Tactics: Establish Identity
- Products: Transportation

I have to say that i kinda got lost on the rest of the section. The words and buzzwords used seemed difficult to add up and track. So i'll just leave it what ive got.

>Security Forces:
Troopers 5 10sec (These are recruited from Free Radicals sports programs and come from the paintball and freerunning teams, aswell as the inline skating teams. They mostly come from the lower leagues of these sports programs and it is a condition of their employment that they augment the standard watchmen security guards.)

Thats enough for now.

>>54446660
>>54446673
>>54446686
OK gonna share my mind on all of these, just stream of consciousness whatever I think.

>Lenth
As a mentor offers a jumping-off point but not great long-term growth if you want to specialize and grow in power. As a friend, he's great for knowledge-type folks and less for others.

>Sulvora
Pretty average as a mentor, like do you want to learn her stuff? As a lover she seems like the "Cold and distant ice queen but with a heart of gold" which isn't my style but some people really love because you see it everywhere. As a friend it seems like she'd take a LONG time to be not just business but loyalty is her strong suit and in business and beyond that's a good thing to have

>Alenso
Knowledgable enough to make a good mentor, chill enough to make a good friend, just don't rely on him in a firefight.

>Lei
She will not comfort or coddle you. Great trait in a mentor, acceptable in a lover (at least for me), kinda iffy as a friend. I love the passion for the unknown though, that could make up for it if you don't mind her low empathy for outsiders

>Mumbali
Total bro tier, good mentor good friend, he's just a little weird/foriegn

>Imindis
I like her better than Sulvora as a friend or lover (worse as a mentor -- you can't do thethings she does). I feel she's got a better personality to play the "Will take some time to warm up/open up" with. Honestly, I kind of want to take her as friend because she'd seem to need it as much as I would.

>Calladan
Great mentor if you want to follow his path and decent friend

>Evala
Not a good mentor since her prime skills can't be taught but as a lover or friend, wow. I like having the waifu option of someone who's impetuous with her own desires, not just living waiting for that partner.

>Omion
Seems like he'd make a good friend (If he's your friend you're cool with void magic) and was my favorite mentor of the WIP set, still top tier because he's deep in an interesting field.

>Ciara
-10hp :'(

>>54447782
Excellent! Hot warband, complete with skald, away!

Hypothetically, if someone were to be writing a waifu-picker with light chess theming, what should they call it? All the things I can think of sound pretentious as all hell.

>>54447773
Very useful! I didn't intend for Githuiue to be unable to accept anything outside of her religion, just unable to accept things that contradicted her religion. I can see how that would be overly aggravating in terms of her being unappealing. I'll consider the issue.

Similar for Lothienye, I can see where you are coming from, and consider weakening those traits slightly.

I just got here, someone tell me whats going on with tolk please.

>>54447835
Some people didn't like his latest work so he threw a hissy fit and fucked off somewhere.

>>54447830
Love: Black and White
Love is a Battlefield
That's Wizard's Chess
Game of the Heart
Check Your Mate
King Me

>>54447717
>They're not
I've mentioned their actual personality traits, what have you done but make one line rejections? I don't care what other people say if this is all they do.

I guess I should say that I consider being an asshole to me 'talking down'? If you really are so invested in being a pedant about it.

>>54447487
>>54447662
With a little extra thought, I think I know the core issue.

It's a lack of shared interests. I'm interested in science and study at heart, but all the academic characters in this CYOA are the ones with the worst attitudes. There's nobody I can get along with as a human being AND share my interests with. This is why I'm not into any of them.

>>54447782
Can't help but bead this post as just a dismissal. You and those anons act like you put up a spirited defense of these characters when all you did was maybe quote one line per reply but otherwise just post "No." Indeed, the case you're talking about here is a mention that 'she's not without compassion', which in writing is often used to denotate a character who is going to behave hateful/malignant but who you want to include at least one humanizing element to. While she doesn't go so far as to deserve those labels, just the statement of 'she's cold-hearted but she isn't without compassion' doesn't indicate anything else without some better examples of what she actually WILL be compassionate about.

can someone post magical awakening?

>>54446660
Alright i decided
>Mentor: Alion Ellonen - Blade Singer
A smug elf yes, but his decades(?) of experience, and his ability to cast while fighting makes him a great mentor with skills that i want to learn.
>Lover: Abeta Ravencaller - Witch of the eastern deserts
She wants to purge the worlds evils by fire and considering her(real) age probably for really good reasons. That fire, That conviction, she really does has something that i really like. Not sure what it is though.
>Friend:Nina Milas - Summoner
Heh, She really does seem like a person to share a good laugh with. Maybe a bit too vain but eh, i am already dealing with the elf so it can't be that bad

>>54447875
The last two seem pretty good.

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>>54447875
Good shit anon

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>>54447925

>>54447875
>King me
>Suggesting a checkers-themed name for a chess-themed CYOA

>>54447999
Good point

>>54447830
Love's Gambit

>>54447875
I like Black and White for this hypothetical CYOA. Thank you, I appreciate the help.

>>54447797
Excellent detail in input, thanks. What's the "-10hp" mean, though?

>>54447888
>Interested in science and study at heart... This is why I'm not into any of them.
This is actually, really helpful, anon. There aren't many who are into academic knowledge. I mean, it's a fantasy setting, so there aren't going to be true scientists, but I'll add at least one "knowledge is power" type to the 4th page.

>bead this as dismissal
Think of it rather, anon, as recognition on my part that we are flatly not going to agree on that particular point, and a desire to move on to more productive pursuits. Descriptions are limited, and there is a certain amount of reading into the characters that must be done. I do not read them as you do, and that's all.

>>54446709
Well, my opinion is shit, but you asked for it.
I really like potions and alchemy, but I also have a strong distaste for haughty nobles.

/Ms./ Evet has a skill set I like, but simply isn't my cup of tea. That isn't to say that this wouldn't lead to an interesting party dynamic, and I've already considered several combinations involving her, but all of them combine Friend and Mentor into a single character while leaving her as a distant college.

Just my opinion though. Alchemy and weird nobles go together well, and she's a fine character. I just don't like her.

>>54447797
>>54446673

If it wasn't clear, I'm the one who'd shared that complaint about Ciara before.

>Dukon
Great friend if you're on his side, terrible if you're not, that's kinda his thing.

>Cilia
The magic mood swings are interesting. I think she'd make a better friend or mentor than lover but that's just me.

>Tige
Fairly good mentor, I like the thought of being more a competitive junior than a straight-up student.

>Lothienye
One of two whose names trip me up. She seems like a Druid Mentor and... that's about it. There's not a lot to her as a person that's not tied up in druid-ness.

>Umur
Fairly good mentor, maybe better friend. I kind of like thinking of befriending him as a martial and doing the "Vitriolic best buds" act, as well as naturally as a mage.

>Githiue
The other real tongue/finger twister name and... wow this is the kind of bitch I hate. But she's more for the DEUS VULT crowd.

>Tane
Great friend, actually comes with an arc built in, but I'm not sure what he'd offer as a mentor.

>Suse
I didn't want to like her but I like her, there. It's the curiosity and wonder that won me over, I almost wonder if "Sense of wonder" couldn't be played up over "Purey pure heart". I mean she has and could still have both but it seems a better counterpoint to naive. Two sides of the same coin.

>Edramir
You can't trust him. That's a big imposition but I guess if he's your mentor he'll show you how to lie?

>Wulfwe
Very much the amazon/barbarian girl. She owns the trope but because she's stern and disciplined she might be a little light. I like that she's not dull and doesn't "Grr smash puny sparkly man" and instead respects magic and presumably trade skill as well as martial skill. Maybe hint the way(s) in which she could grow, though?

>Ilhas
Seems a better mentor than friend, but will grow with a friend so that turns it around. He's interesting.

I'm curious about the people who choose to genderbend in their CYOA choices.

http://www.strawpoll.me/13498477

>>54448093
One SD?

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>>54448117
standard deviation.

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>>54446660
Imindis would make a good friendo. If we are just friends then she knows I don't have an ulterior motive when I tell her she's pretty and to not listen to children who tease. We would probably get along since we seem similar and we could relate.

Kathil would be a good mentor. I'd like to learn music and use it to inspire and entertain. Plus it would be nice to sing songs about..

Suse. It seems like she would approve of my profession. And I could play while she worked, so she would have the hippest hospital in the land. I would always be helpful and supportive of her and her work. We go around doing good, her healing the body and me healing the nerves.

>>54448117
1SD below average would mean being uglier than 84% of the population

>>54447830
Mate in One.

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>>54448117
A

>>54448074
hmm... I'm not saying I definitely will, but if there were a male alchemist who I could make distinct enough from her power-wise, would you be more inclined to take him? (whether as a mentor or whatever)

>>54448081
As, that answers my question about Ciara.

Yeah, Cilia is meant to be a fantastical embodiment of the stereotype of the woman with extreme mood swings. As a lover, she would not be for me either.
Lothienye does seem like she needs some work after two good criticisms.
Love the vitriolic buds bit with Umur.
You make a good point on Suse; I'll consider it.
Edramir... I may need to add in there somewhere that he's loyal to his friends.
Wulfwe, very interesting idea.

Thanks for the detailed feedback, anon.

>>54448207
That's a neat concept, but I think it would sound better with almost any other number of moves.

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>>54444349
ebin meltdown

>>54448093
Too vain for that sorry. i consider myself pretty good looking i would accept an equivalent exchange though Well not really i don't want to be hot i want to be cute and adorable

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>>54447830
Check Em

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>>54448300
W-wah! I g-got 'em. D-did you see it g-guys? I got d-dubs!

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>>54448300
You did it!

>>54447640
>>54447667
>>54447688
Tok if you are going to leave then do so.
We are getting tired of you autofelating yourself.

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>>54431952
>>54432088

>Everything was nerfed.

Wow it's complete dogshit now.

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>>54444005
Have to agree with >>54444116 .

Anon, we're gonna have a hellish three years of suffering but damn it'll be awesome once we get past wanting to die from the agony and confusion.

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>>54448322
Waaahhhh!! I g-got them twice!

>>54448081
>>54446686

>Siga
A good mentor since she's a knowledgable specialist, if you don't mind her envious side. I don't like zealots, but a lot of people will.

>Mesym
Best mentor on the world itself, but other than his unknown-and-dont-you-dare-ask past he seems a little... plain? Like he's not bad but he;s business at business time, chill after hours, seems pretty normal... I'll give him a pass for that past.

>Nina
Speaking of checkered noodle incident pasts, I like hers! The more I think of her the more I like her. She's flirtatious without being slutty (Which IMO is fine in a waifu/lover), has a nice little character flaw in that vanity that could be fun to work with, and seems really fun to be around as a friend while having a special skill to teach as a mentor.

>Masorn
Kind of a male Nina, he just seems like he;d be a blast without being unrealistically all-upside. Good character.

>Sheli
Has to trade a lot on dwarvendom. You say she;s Wonder/Pride but her text reads more like curiosity/temper.

>Alion
A good mentor with some neat hints about the world in his text, but seems kind of hard to befriend. Might be worth it, though.

>Lady Evet
I don't mind that she's a noble who wants to be addressed by her title, it's her fucking title and I read that more as at least an affectation of being prim, proper, and standing on ceremony. Affectation because she's up for alchemy and the dark arts, so however much of a blueblood she is there's another side. I like her a lot.

>Oakstrider
Has a little more personality than just being Druid Mc. Druid so if one of the druids would be cit I'd keep him and cut/rewrite Lothienye since has more of a personality beyond job.

>Abeta
God-tier mentor, fucking wierd to Waifu since this incarnation seems like she's physically still a kid, weird but potentially good friend.

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>>54440642
Hargen, the Harbinger of the New World

>World
Nobledark

>Power
Born Leader

>Birthright
Cursed One

>Gear
Astral Mark
Khanda
Kriscarn

>Mentor
Witch Allyn

>Companions
Arctora
Erefexus

>Mount
Hawk Griffin

>Starting Location
Putrid Slum

I will use my gifts to usher in a new age. I will rally those who despise the crown and make them my cultist. I will use them to wage war upon the crown and upon those who would dare oppose my rise to power, and I will crush them into submission. I will become the king of this new world, an absolute and eternal monarch. Those who worship me will be gifted, and those who oppose me will be killed.

>>54448364
Got verbose there...

>Redar
Again, doesn't seem a great mentor choice because inborn powers, though maybe he could unlock hidden potential? Really he seems like a lover choice for those interested in a male lover.

>Kathil
Okay, she honestly made me chuckle. Seems like an overactor, which is common in performance-type people, but the positivity is a good balance point to avoid her becoming a drama queen. Just the idea at her waxing poetic on whatever slime pit we've fallen into makes me want to consider her as a friend or, with the right idea of the story to live, even maybe a Lover. And she's a master specialist so she's a legit mentor choice too, one who would be a little more interesting than just a teacher.

>>54440758
>Silent, Determined Servant of Servos
>Truthful Statistics of Myriad Information
>Virtual Assistant of Browsing and Searching
>Instant Break Time of Indefinite Length
>Goo Maid of Non-Sexual Cleanliness
>Control Center of Enviromental Status

Yea, would use the trutthful statistics for insider trading to become rich.
But I wouldn't be an asshole about it.
I'd use the monies on education and the indefinite break time to hit the books hard.
If it's something that can conceivably be reached trough enough contemplation I'd try to do so.

I'd also buy a latex suit for the Goo Maid and hit it off anyway.

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So did I miss our funeral for Tok?
Who gave the eulogy?

>>54445354

Pump your brakes, kid. That man was a national treasure.

>>54446660
>>54446673
>>54446686

Mentor: Oakstrider. It sounds like he has the most to teach and the patience to teach it, and on top of that just sounds like a cool guy to hang out with.

Lover: Tough one. I like Kathil, Imindis, and Evala. I think I might prefer Kathil the most, but it's a close thing.

Friend: Suse. I want to ruffle her hair until she stamps her feet and insists that she's not a child and that she can take care of herself.

The only one I actively disliked was Lothienye. Her only role seems to be druid mentor, and for that I'd much rather take Oakstrider. The only reason I can really see to take Lothienye over him is that Lothienye is an attractive woman, but she's grating enough that I wouldn't really want her as a lover.

>>54448235
>would you be more inclined to take him
Probably. Alchemy can have more to it than potions and poisons, and depending on who you make, they may come into competition with my options for mentor. (Alenso, Ilhas, and Abeta, to name them.)

>>54448238
Yeah, I didn't really care about the number, I just wanted it to be a "Mate in X" name. You can choose any other number if you want.

>>54448350

What are you talking about? Not only is there an option to take 40 more points AND keep your immortality after the current day is passed once again, but he added more bullshit magic options like Compulsion.

It's basically a more refined version, with pictures and more options for rp worlds

>>54448235
>if there were a male alchemist who I could make distinct enough from her power-wise, would you be more inclined to take him?
More alchemists are good. I'd be totally interested in seeing one who's into transmutation or homunculus/takwin shenanigans.

>>54448350
With respect, anon, I'm not sure what you're on about. Presuming you are comparing to the 1st edition, I'm fairly certain the only thing nerfed is the imperviousness thing, and that's only for multiplayer. In all other respects the new version gives you more flexibility, and more assured immortality.

>>54448364
>>54448445
Thanks again for all the great feedback. Specific responses on a few:
>Sheli
Will reconsider whether her stated traits match her text.
>Alion
Yeah, Alion I original chose as the trap option. But I actually found a way I think to incorporate him into the lore in a meaningful way, so that he doesn't *have* to be that. But if I can put an option in there that is appealing to some without compromising the integrity of the setting, I certainly don't mind doing so.
>Oakstrider
Yeah, Lothienye definitely needs work I'm now convinced.
>Abeta
I take no stance on people waifuing her. It's not to my tastes, and if anyone asks me under oath I'm assuming they wait until she grows up. Remember that Abeta has a soft spot for innocents, though, so god help them if she thinks they are pedos.
>Redar
He was initially chosen as a pretty-boy, but the text at the beginning is supposed to indicate that anon has the potential to learn from *any* of the people. I should probably make that more clear.

>>54447790
Really cool that you made a moodboard.
That's one of my favorite things with overlord cyoas, the builds can become little pieces of worldbuilding by themselves.

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Completed page 2 incoming.

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>>54448712

>>54448712
>>54448752
Woah, an update. I've been looking forwards to this.

>>54440642
What would be a GrimBright setting?

>>54448712
>>54448752
Yaaaaaay!

>>54448570
>>54448652
>>54448680
The third level of strength and speed was completely removed it's not even there for non multiplayer only like impervious.

>>54448530
He's not dead, he just became an exclusive reddit cyoa author now.

>>54448712
poor stuff man, you suck

>>54448958
>when you post oc and some fag just calls you a fag

>>54448958
That's the last straw, I'm going to Reddit.

$25 gift certificates here I come.

>>54449011
Oh shit, I can get money from Reddit? Hold up, lemme come with.

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>>54449011

>>54449028
Oh hey Wyrm you are still alive! do you have any proyect in the making?

>>54448752
Other than Sex I'm not sure what else to pick.

>>54449075
I'm the one prepping this Superhero CYOA, as an easy project to get back in the swing of things. After that, I might do something more original with some actual lore.

>>54449079
>not picking the Familiar option as a way of thanking the guy who saved you and also his entire dimension

>>54448580
Yeah, it's official. Lothienye will either be changed or axed for the next one.

Thanks for the build! Love the imagery with Suse.

>>54448621
>>54448665
Takwin is a great idea, especially.

>>54448712
>>54448752
>Nokomis
Smart, sexy, with access to forbidden knowledge. Sign me up.
>+10
>True Love, Mutual Major Advantage, +10
>Interests, Mutual Minor Advantage, +10
>Attraction, Mutual Minor Advantage, +10
>Libido, none, +10
>Empathy, Mutual Minor Advantage, +10
>Dominance, Your Minor Advantage, +5
>Support, none
>Others, Mutual Major Advantage, +5

>Features
>Pointy Ears
>Wings
>Fairy Eyes
>Antlers
>Tongue
>Luminous
Charming King of Peace

>Sun's Tail
>Bloom

>>54448860
Hmm... I had to check, but you're right. I'm not sure why I did that, to be honest. (That's not "everything", though I will note). However, I have no issue adding that back in to the next version, restricted to non-multiplayer.

>>54449119
Nah, man. If I pick Maurelle, then Heartstone and Dark City are the obvious choices.

My cyoa is set in an alternative universe with technology comparable to our late middle ages. I'm looking for pictures of landscapes and companions, probably mostly females becaue reason. I want to try art different than than anime-looking stuff. Which link from the pastebin should I click if I want to something at least as reliable as boorus in finding various cute anime girl pics? Collecting pics is my least favorite part of cyoa making.

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>>54448752
>cyoa makes you choose between your love for mpreg cuntboy societies and your obsession for minmaxxing

>>54448712
>>54448752
the problem is that if you want a good relationship you'll end up with spare mg

>>54446660
Updating my build, with a bit of blending
>Mentor (/friend) - Tige Ealhsin
Learning spirit channeling, talking philosophy, not being a lazy shit - it's all good.
>Lover (/mentor) - Evala Harvest
She's definitely up there for waifus, and two different techniques that are powered by the spirit have to interact somehow.
>Friend (/lover) - Nina Milas
Too high energy to get into a proper relationship with, but definitely fun to fool around - and I might try to crib some enhancement techniques off her.

Pretty simple magic build, might dabble in shamanism or 'traditional' magic later.

The new choices seem just as interesting as the other ones, and there isn't any major role left unfilled - maybe a (female) drunken master, or spirit caller/shaman, but those are generally secondary.

>>54448093
As an ugly girl, I'm interested in the results of this poll too.

>>54449330
He should give us an option to spend extra mg on fairy absinthe and LSD

>>54449174
deviantart, artstation and coolvibe seem to suck, at least for image hunting
pinterest and pixiv require an account so didn't check them
the rest is full of anime

>>54448752
I'm going to be honest with you. I'm not in love with the public works. The thing bothering me is that some of them almost punish you for not picking them. Example: not picking Seasons implies certain fairies and spirits will die.