/cyoag/ - CYOA General

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>>53903169

how many of you authors out there have created characters in cyoas by basing them off of people you really know/knew or yourself? and how did it go for you?

>>53903212
I am indeed friends with a skeleton that tells me to kill the president.

>>53903212
Most everyone here has an imaginary waifu.

Most of those waifus are Saber

Which authorfag is the Nasu of /cyoag/?

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>>53903380

>>53903345
Drake: Inferno/Imbue
Extra Special
100
Light Gun: Pistol
Light Melee: Claw gauntlets
Flight Armor, Regen
Major Explosives, restored
Neo Medical Bay

Sarah Goodman

Basically, I fly around vomiting explosions and fire, then make the fire do all sorts of cool shit. I'm a bit manic-depressive and sometimes get over-eager to go blow up some dudes.

Gifted cyoa?

>>53903345
>>53903363
>>53903380
>>53903405
You know I find this all pretty tragic because with the Ravagers DLC,you find out that the Fiends are all humans who were experimented on and are only taking their revenge on humanity.

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Man I'm so glad I've found more cyoa here. I only fed off some CYOAs in random and I always enjoyed them. Never knew there was an abundance of them at /tg/. Now I just do like 2 hours of CYOA before I head to sleep. Thanks you guys at /tg/ for being awesome.

>>53903635
It's a long dark fall into despair and addiction, anon.
Leave while you still have the strength to turn away. Save yourself!

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>>53903635
It's all art here.

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>>53903604
sure thing

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>>53903688

>>53903345
>Arachne
>Builder
>Boost
>Light Gun: Revolver
>Light Melee: Combat Knife
>Arachne Silk Armor. Do I really have to pay for it?
>Tank, Nanomachines
>Turret: Heavy Weapon: Minigun. Mounted on the tank.
>Humvee, Nanomachines
>Light Combat Drone: Medium: Shotgun.
>Support Drone
>Sarah Goodman

I drive around building stuff out of web. I make fortifications, patch holes, and give people fancy armor. My vehicle is usually coated in a bunch of reinforcing armor, so it's pretty beefy.

>>53903212
Not quite, but I did base a couple of unrelated companions on some pen and paper character ideas my fiancee had that we never got to use

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>>53903721

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>>53903622
Let's build some squads, build a few maidens, and let them fight eachother!

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>>53903735

>>53903746
Honestly I kinda wanna see how humans react when they find out that one the Fiends were humans like them and two,this is all the government's fault

>>53903746
Training: Quick Learning
Spectacle, Suppress
Dark Portal, Instant Portal
Time Stop, True Stop

Juggernauts, Explosive Seers, Champion & Warbeasts, Hunters, Outsider Medics

Infiltrate under the guise of a desperate human girl, use Time Stop and Illusions to create an opening, then suddenly a bunch of skilled combatants are everywhere in the base, smashing things and blowing up.

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Someone post that CYOA from SDA where you fuck your student.
Please.

>>53903773
There'd be mass outrage in the civil sector to be sure, but given the crisis at hand the military will be likely sitting on pins and needles ready and waiting to put down anything that looks like it'll get out of hand.

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>>53903927

Can you fuck the tactical mini girls?

>>53903917
And things will start falling apart.....after all,how can you trust your government and military if they're the ones responsible for all the deaths and destruction...and how can you be sure they're still not doing their vile experiments even now.

>>53903954
>.....
Just a heads up, newfriend, the use of ellipses are typically looked down upon here.

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>>53903944
How do you plan on sticking your dick inside them?

They're like the size of a figurine.

>>53903927
>Fuck cowboys, I'm an anime with a gun.
>Give Mr Mildington some guns too, I'm sure he's old enough for the responsibility.
>Lets drag the icecream vendor along, she can help carry our(my) shit.
>Mikotonoshiroitori sounds like a dick, but I like his name. He can tell us how much property damage we cause.
Nothing can even go wrong.

>>53903944
I imagine you can try, but since it says nothing about durability I expect it would probably kill them.
You could absolutely molest or otherwise play gently with them, though.

>>53904024
They can give you a body job at best.

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>>53903927

>Fuck Yeah Man
I'm a cowboy now bitches

>Cowgirl Emma
I can't be a cowboy without bitches

>Mikey Hikaru
Seems like a nice guy and sidekick

>Egyptian Magic Tome
Nigga, magic

>I'm now a Cowboy/Necromancer having comfy adventures with my friend and my bitch.

>>53903927
Cowboy
Emma and Cornelius
Minigirls.
I sic Emma on Cornelius then me and the minigirls watch and pleasure ourselves to the ensuing carnage.

>>53903169
source for the condition image

>>53904048
>Body jobs
>If they work together they might be able to form something resembling an orifice
>You can lick them all over like a weirdo
>You can tongue-fuck their brains out
>They might be able to fuck your pinkie
>The older one is apparently great at talking dirty
>Can you say cum tribute?
>Seemingly unconditional love
Truly the pervert's pick.

>>53903927
So when it says Midlington is great at handling shotguns, does it mean actual shotguns or penises?

>>53903169
>Roughly 1000 cubic centimeters of flesh can be altered, grown, or removed per week.
That seems a bit underwhelming.

>>53903927
Winning combos:
Emma and Jennifer. The two can probably occupy eachother for days.
Cornelius and Minigirls. Just imagine what the older one will make him do.
Mikey and Mikotonoshiroitori. Mikey learns how to be a real hardcore badass weeb, and Miko gains some perspective on how much worse off he could be.
Ice Cream Seller and Magic Tome: That awesome comfy napping position means she's happier, which means she is producing more ice cream.

Emma and Flatty. Flatty gets to practice raping girls while also blowing off some of that emotional steam. Emma gets someone to rape her.
Mikey and Flatty. Mikey seems like the kind of guy who would love Flatty if you aren't up for it.

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>>53897649
>Background
Allen Avadonia
Male, age 14
Bloody Revolution; Royal Guardian [The Now; Watcher]
"If it's to protect you, I would even become evil."

>Skills
Mid-Tech Understanding
Natural Physique
Martial Training
Tactician
Silver Tongue
Homebody
Foresight
Stone Soul

>Items
-Clothing
Traveller Leathers [Yellow overcoat]
Wealthy Attire
Plebian Attire

-Weapons
Yuta Brace
Dangulf Sword
Flint Knife
NeverFail Utilityblade
Poisons [ACI]

-Knick-knacks
Standard Kit
Mathery Travellers Encyclopedia Vol 1-8324
Historical Novelties [Ancient gold pocketwatch]
Traveller Corpse Soap
Flux Generator
Replicator
Coral Chess Piece |Queen|
Blessed Needle & Thread
Omni Camping Equipment
Self Operating Cooking Gear
Cohort Setup Package

>Little Things...
Waste of Skin
Notably Charitable x4
Minor
Terrorized
My Best Friend
Off-world Obligations

>Faction
Lonesome Road

>Covenant
None

>Companions
Salah ad-Din Yusuf Bin Ayyub [Guardian]
Ali
Cazora Magdeb
Fleana Uoa
Croatmor
Mithra
Nessa Arrim
Cordyceps
Dave

>Home District
Free Traveler

>Hubworld
Free Traveler [Legiclator Reotri]

>PANIC
The Unbreakable

>PATH
That Rare Frown

Recruited into the Travellers after a bungled universe jump planted a number of members in the middle of a civil war. His potential, both as a Traveller and a combatant, peaked their interested and as soon as the battle began to wind down they essentially abducted him to Ae, though Allen barely resisted being in a near-catatonic state.

Formerly a royal bodyguard to a tyrant queen, a final attempt to ruse the revolutionaries and save his Queen failed and he watched her cut down before his eyes. Overtaken by rage, he slaughtered nearly all responsible before he was knocked out, only to awaken in a room bathed in blood and these strange figures.

>>53904246

Since arriving, he has slowly been pulled out of his funk, though something vital is still missing from his life. He was placed under the care of Salah ad-Din to nurture his natural talents, and he has made friends with several other people who are either younger than most travelers or otherwise outcasts, and he plans to form a Cohort as a support group. He continues to visit his native timeline to check up on his adoptive sister from the shadows, for even now he cares for her.

Allen is skilled in swordplay, battlefield tactics, politics, diplomacy, long-term planning, cooking, cleaning, and various other menial tasks as he was previously a servant. He's also a very competent bodyguard, though he no longer has anyone left to 'guard'. If someone important enough came along, he might pledge his blade to them.

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>>53903746
>all nightmare callers are young women

Another CYOA ruined by anons with little girl fetishes.

>>53904258
Not all. It outright mentions male callers in the broodmother section.

>>53904258
It's because Nightmare Callers are the Fiendish Maidens listed in >>53903405.

>>53904265
>It outright mentions male callers in the broodmother section.
No, it mentions people who were male before being turned into Nightmare Callers.

>>53904011

You've clearly not dug around on the internet enough if you think that would stop someone who gets off on figurines or tiny girls. I've seen enough videos to prove otherwise.

It also doesn't hurt that the girls are dedicated to their so-called husband, so they would probably be eager to work something out.

>>53904265
All nightmare callers are little girls, that reference just talks about callers who were previously men having harder time adjusting.

>>53904258
Most cyoas refer to you as male or explicitly require you to man, try to survive the single cyoa that has you be girl instead

>>53904299
But they also tend to have a "be a little girl option"

>>53903304
Italics probably, they make the most chuuni cyoas.

>>53903345
What's the point of having a base with that points limit? Focusing only on personal items seems more efficient for battle.

>>53904299
>Most cyoas refer to you as male or explicitly require you to man
Let's be real here for a second, the vast majority of people that play cyoa's on this board are males. So of course the majority of cyoa's made are going to be targeted towards males.

>try to survive the single cyoa that has you be girl instead
It's not just this one, I've seen tons of cyoa's that make you be a little girl. It's fucking weird and forces me to completely skip a cyoa that could of been very promising.

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Could use some advice anons; I'm working on another adventure CYOA (a couple actually, but who knows which ones will ever see the light of day) and wanted some thoughts on class and skill balancing.

I'm leaning towards just doing something like I did for Blackrock Dungeoneering where you pick a class and a specialisation, but with more choices. Did this work okay for you guys, or should I look into just having a menu of skills you can choose from to build your own class as it were, or even both; pick a class and a special skill and then some back up skills from a generic list?

I kind of like having classes myself, writing them up helps me add a little flavour.

>>53904391
It's meant to be multiplayer CYOA

>>53904432
Do what feels best to write. That's what keeps you interested in finishing something. If you feel that classes help you add flavor, and you like that, then by all means do that.

>>53904432
Post Blackrock Dungeoneering to rejog my memory.

Someone post all new CYOAs from last thread

>>53904432
>pick a class and a special skill and then some back up skills from a generic list
This is probably the best choice. If you are really, really good at writing, then having just a list of skills can work but it can easily become a too generic. Classes give a lot of flavour and personality but it can be a problem if they become too restricting.

Like in Blackrock, having access to healing was major consideration, especially before the companion changes. Being able to pick up generic healing skill probably wouldn't be nowhere near as good as actual healing focused Godhand but it would remove a bit of pressure from "am I going to suffer death by thousand cuts?", thus making other classes seem more viable.

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>>53904486
Here you go.
>>53904482
>That's what keeps you interested in finishing something.
Thats true, lord knows I have enough dead projects that bored me to show for it.
>>53904518
Yeah, sounds good. The current premise for this is going to be less restrictive anyway, at least in terms of imaginary success rates; combat and and noncombat classes, that kind of thing.

>>53904391
It's meant to have teams of 4, who would share a base.

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1 day left for builds (if highlander is even still here)

>>53904741
ants

>>53904186
It's because that power controls the way tissue grows, rather than magicking up more of it. This means it's limited somewhat by what the body can support. It's still extremely fast by the standards of natural growth.

>>53904404
Don't worry anon you will soon want to be a cute little girl like us

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>>53904741
-The Now; Watcher

--Tech Understanding levels -High
--Martial Training
--Steam Adept
--Sage
--Critical
--Cheaterman
--Airborne
--Long Player

- Traveller leathers
- Upgrade 1
- Yuta Brace
- Upgrade 1
- Yuta partner Brace
- Seven shot Colt Revolver
- Seven shot Colt Revolver
- Dangulf Sword - Enchantments (medium)[Tainted Blade, Cuts beconme infected easy, are extra painful and take a long time to heal]
- NeverFail Utilityblade
- 'Pegs'
- Basic Survival Kit
- Basic Bag
- ID Card
- Shattered Yith Conscious
- Magical Protection Vestments
- Multiversal Timekeeper
- Personal Gravity Manipulator
- Glepnir Chain
- Devil Bone Dice
- Faustian Bargain
- Self Operating Cooking Gear
- Purbolo Flying Stone Airship
- Physical Formatting
- Physical Restructuring

- Test subject
- Addict (Gambling)
- Unlucky

The True Travelers

The Anarchist Commune

Gedzud Tochik
Captain Grahm
Croatmor
Morp 'Rottwhiler' Grunadic
Tug

Ospherous Reserve

Free Traveler[Courier|

The God

>>53904565
Is it actually possible to take any class but Reclaimer? Since you're stuck in the dungeon with no option to come back and resupply, the party needs some way of getting food, and apart from the Lair, it's not as if food is going to just be readily available.

None of the companions seem to have Reclaimer skill either, so if you don't take it, you can't even cover it with other members.

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>>53904432
>a menu

I like the sound of that.

>>53904371
Whatever happened to Italics?

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>>53904843
Anyone can still scavenge for food, Reclaimer is just the best at it. Its the quality of life choice.

>>53904844
You'll be pleased to know that one of the prospective noncombat classes is a cook/chef type, and I'm already writing up what flavours the different types of meat from the dragons you'll hunt will be like

>>53903169
I would like a power/ability that gives me an overall understanding of all human technology up to the 21st century, allowing me to slowly tech-up in a new dimension.
Eidetic + a few years in a good library would reproduce this effect, so it probably shouldn't be more than 3 points by itself or 2 pts as an upgrade to Eidetic.

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>>53904834
A smuggler of renown, works for the couriers due to his skill in getting large cargo from one place to another. Looked down upon by many for his bad habits, he remains upbeat, if only because hes about to ask his friends for a loan. Skilled in complicated plans, especially when they revolve around cheating in games of chance, and this carries through to his combat style, using cheap tactics, and finishes fights in the easiest way possible.

His airship is dressed up as a traditional blimp, even though the 'baloon' is just hollow and lined with floating stone. While not the most skilled pilot in the ranks, Lucas is still up there as one of the better airship pilots around.

>>53904874
I was not asking for permission

>>53904941
You can do that, though Record might be quicker for just grabbing reference material.

You can even use Perfect Shards to emulate some of the most basic bits of technology to help speed things up.

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>>53904887
D-dragon meat is low fat, right?

>>53905050
well, I imagine acquiring it will be a lot of exercise, so its okay. You have to replenish the reserves you burned off in the hunt.

>>53905072
I imagine dragon would be tough and gamey, like boar.

>>53905050
>>53905072
But dragons spend most days sleeping on piles of gold - there's no way they can be anything but big piles of juicy fat in a scaly wrapping.

>>53905106
Sounds kind of delicious actually

>>53905072
That means he's going to starve, Anon.

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>>53904874
But thou must

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>>53905106
Most lizards aren't that fatty though because they don't need to store a lot of fat. If a dragon is warmblooded through conventional means then it would have a good reason to have a lot of fat, but if it's basically a reptile with magic fire breath then it has no reason to store that much fat, and being a flying creature extra fat would be a rather bad thing.

>>53905145
The extra fat is essential for sleeping on piles of gold though since it will provide natural cushioning.

Also, even magical fire breath can't stop the natural wastage of muscle mass to fat reserves. How many dragons do you think go for daily jogs around their domains?

>>53905219
That wastage isn't a thing for reptiles, they can sleep or sit still for very long periods of time and see no decrease in muscle mass.

>>53903169
>Stayed up till 4:35 over hear in Burgerland to work on companions because one dude wanted more content from my minor niche CYOA.

Well I am going the fuck to bed now.

>>53905282
Sleep well anon

>>53903212
Not a single one of my characters have been based off real people I know, though there have been references to others.

The image-searching almost always leads to characters based on the art.

>>53903169
I'll take the Mind&Body package

Mind: [total 23pts]
Willpower-based gating (5 pts)
Motivation (1 pt)
Eidetic (3 pts)
Sense (2 pts)
Whispers (3 pts)
Puppet (4 pts)
Condition (5 pts)

Body: [total 13pts]
Peak Fitness (1 pt)
Regeneration (3 pts)
Powerhouse (4 pts)
Agelessness (5 pts)

Relying not at all on external gadgets and tools that can be taken from me, this combination of optimised body and supreme will should allow me to explore the multiverse with confidence that I can deal with whatever I encounter.

>>53904759
Have to agree, it's extremely underwhelming for a 1 a week ability.

>>53905534
>posting a literally god tier cyoa

>>53903212
Sometimes. A lot of personality traits I write into characters are things I've picked up from various people I've interacted with personally. Especially in terms of conversation, I base a lot of speech off of speech patterns I'm familiar with, whether I intend to or not. I try not to follow how people speak in movies or television because I find that they usually aren't that natural sounding, as it's part of the nature of acting.

Sometimes I base character speech patterns over audio samples, like interviews or podcasts.

>>53905534
I'll take Nero Saber, and Fate D, we shall become God Emperors of saberkind.

>>53905534
>If you want to be the saber you have to use fate D
>Fate D is cheating
What a terrible design flaw

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>>53905534
>fate/saber stuff

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>>53903212
>>53905638
>and how did it go for you?
Unfortunately it seems people are more interested in more fictitious personalities. I don't really mind though, I feel better about writing characters I can closer relate to.

>>53903891
Try not to get the bad end.

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Here's the real updated one

>>53905737
>Unfortunately it seems people are more interested in more fictitious personalities
Fictitious personalities?

>>53905737
Would've been nice if it was stated what the student hoped to achieve (magic-wise) with the help of a mentor.

>>53905782
Characters in fiction usually aren't like how people act or speak at all.

>>53905794
It's incomplete and getting expanded, kind of. It's currently 4th/5th in line for my WIPs.

Basically I'm not really going to change much about this CYOA in particular, except that I'm gonna focus it more on living in the city as a mentor/researcher.

Then im gonna do a separate CYOA about building spells and acquiring patents for said spells. You'll be able to tie this one in somehow, something along the lines of the students giving you certain benefits for spellcrafting like more efficient mana outputs or cheaper acquisition of mana-tech parts.

>>53903345
why did tech get nerfed so much? it was the only thing superhumans had other than the tastiness gimmick

>>53905680
It's impossible to be perfect without cheating.

>>53905534
Lancer Saber
Fate B
Immortality
Boosted Intelligence
Superhuman Regeneration
Magic Level 2

Let's rule Britain together, and wipe away all her regrets.

>>53905737
As stupid as it is, I kind off miss the fetish listing.
Also, is the alcoholics introduction intentionally supposed to be so terrible? I mean, it's what I expect if someone came into an interview drunk, but I can't imagine anyone going 'oh, this makes me want to pick her'.

>>53904404
>>53904258

The nightmare callers are young women, not little girls. They're legal.

>>53905933
Nah Nightmare Callers can look like little girls. No reason they can't.

Also the concept of 'legal' is tied to numerical age, not physical appearance. Moreover, I doubt it has any baring or relevance when we're talking about evil monsters intent on genociding humanity.

>>53905926
That's the point. She was actually one of the more popular picks.

>>53905963
Evidence people here are retarded.

>>53905963
Wait, what? I mean, I know that the people here have unique tastes, but that's really surprising to me. The only possible explanation I could think of is that they general traits or something. I mean, people can't see someone being drunk in an interview and think 'that sounds like a nice person to work with', right?

>>53905972
Why? Cause she was drunk in an interview due to bad timing and circumstances which is the basis of her character? GPA is high, she's no pushover when it comes to academics.

>>53906005
>Why?
She's a fucking drunk?

>>53905534
Thoth knows how to deliver, thank god we have authors like this, unlike SDA

>>53905972
By what definition is she alcoholic?

>>53906039
>Shows up for fucking interviews drunk
>Drinks twenty glasses of wine at that.

>>53906009
>He never celebrated his champagne birthday
She's based off of my champagne birthday, actually. It was the 21st.

Binge drinking once in awhile doesn't make you a drunk. I'm glad she served that filter well with you, though. That was her point.

>>53906060
I never heard of a champagne birthday, so stop acting like it's normal. And no, she's showing up drunk for interviews, that shows that she's a drunk with a terrible personality and zero professionalism.

I'm writing a letter to the school board recommending she be expelled.

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>>53906060
>It's SDA's "The best girl is the one most like me and everyone who doesn't like her is just a faggot and she's designed to filter them out because she's best choice!" spiel again
Why do you always do this?

>>53906060
Maybe you should include some kind of autism filter at the beginning of your cyoas

>>53906079
I think all CYOA criticism should be presented as in character documents from now on.

>>53906005
Because not only is she drunk in an interview, she also does literally nothing but say 'fugg, I'm drunk'. I mean, if she played it off or something I could that can at least be understood as somewhat charming, but as it stands it really just makes me like her less, especially because I don't really have a clue who is she is. Five bullet points don't suffice, at least not if other characters actually have information in their introductions.

>>53906094
But then SDA wouldn't be able to read them

>>53905737
bad end?
in my make believ?
now you jus foolin

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>>53906105

>>53906060
>Binge drinking once in awhile doesn't make you a drunk
Binge drinking when you have an interview on the next day means you're either a drunk, just generally have no sense of responsibility or just don't give a damn if the interview turns out horribly. None of these are anything but bad qualities.

>>53906124
She didn't have an interview the next day when she started drinking. They only told her they had moved her interview to that day AFTER she was already drunk.

>>53906139
I had assumed that was just an excuse, because there's no way any kind of (non insane) administration would do that, but even assuming it's true you could still just excuse yourself if you don't think you're fit for an interview.

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I need some opinions here. I'm making my first CYOA, and my idea to make it where you are a villain who is being hunted for whatever you did. And so, you must make your character (race, sex, classe, some nice traits), choose who wants to kill you, then make your stronghold or dungeon (with lackeys, traps, cells, rape room , etc) and, at last, create another character which will play as some kind of arch enemy.
You start off with 0 points and the more you invest in your character and dungeon (basically, the more you owe points), the more you will need to invest in your arch enemy (who can easily become more powerful than you). Thus, you have to balance things out or you will lose (about that, I'm trying to fit in a small """""combat"""""" system so you can actually have a win/lose condition).

Is it too overloaded with stuff? Does it interest you at all? Should I add more to it?

>>53906139
Wait, was that supposed to be the truth? I thought it was a 'oh god, I forgot I actually have an interview later' kind of deal.

>>53906163
ditch the combat system, let the reader sort that out.
everything else gets a pass.
Make sure to have god tier waifus to rape
or to love

>>53906079
It's quite normal, lots of people know about it otherwise it wouldn't be a thing. Unfortunate you've never heard of it.

Also this is a university. Good luck getting her expelled on her day off when your interview was impromtu.

>>53906090
That uh, never happened before? And I never said she was the best girl from my point of view?

>>53906101
It's your judgement. Move on to the next interview, anon. Someone else may nab her up. Maybe not.

>>53906124
Congratulations, you've made impressions of her. If your judgement is to disregard her as a candidate, then you don't have to pick her.

>>53906158
Try making that rational decision after 20 glasses.

>>53906163
What if I don't buy anything?

>>53906174
I intended for it to be the truth... maybe, but I'll let you be the judge of that.

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>>53906163
>rape room

>>53906185
>That uh, never happened before?
Too drunk to remember?

>>53906184
or don't i mean it's your work, do whatever you want mang

>>53905737

I assume this is the only page?

>>53906219
Probably. I certainly don't remember it so maybe I was drunk.

>>53906226
For now.

>>53906185
>It's quite normal, lots of people know about it
Apparently not. Also, this 'tradition' seems like a terrible idea since the majority of people are going to hit that day before the legal drinking age.

>Good luck getting her expelled
I don't think this one incident will get her expelled, but showing up for official interviews drunk, along with the public drunkenness in general, is going to see her get heavily reprimanded and hopefully put on some form of probation, including an expulsion from the program. This will hopefully teach her that her actions have consequences.

>>53906163
Sounds pretty good anon, if you can make it work like you envisage.

Balancing that kind of thing could be a problem; it might be worth dropping the combat mechanic if it ends up more trouble than its worth.

I like the idea that the more points you assign yourself the more your nemesis will have though, that should make for a fun variety of builds.

Also happy endings where you fall in love with your nemesis as an option please

>>53906185
>If your judgement is to disregard her as a candidate, then you don't have to pick her.
Are you new? This is /cyoag/, if even a single option doesn't fit anon's tastes then prepare to be shitposted to oblivion.

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>>53906241
im seconding spoiler option :D

>>53906242
People say they don't like a choice, so they obviously must be shitposting. You really have it figured out.

>>53906242
That's not even what happened here. One person asked SDA a question and more people replied to something SDA said (about her being popular) then they answered when SDA asked a question.

>>53906240
>Apparently not. Also, this 'tradition' seems like a terrible idea since the majority of people are going to hit that day before the legal drinking age.

>everywhere is america

no

>>53906260
For it not to apply to the majority of people, you'd have to live in a place where the legal drinking age is 15 or less.

>>53906273
Anon, even if it isn't the majority, plenty of people are going to be able to do the champagne birthday thing. It may not be common but its hardly anything to find surprising either.

>>53903622
Doesn't make it right, though. Like it's tragic, but killing everyone is not an acceptable response to their tragedy. Thus, killing them in self defense is a much more understandable and correct side.

>>53906258
everyone is shitposting constantly, they just simply don't know it

>>53906163
Sounds like fun, though the combat mechanics could screw it, or make it more fun, though more likely to screw it.

>>53906298
It makes it an abnormality.

>>53906185
>It's your judgement. Move on to the next interview, anon.
I don't get it. Are you mad that I'm saying that I don't like the choice and think it's weird that people like it? I mean, I'm not attacking you or anything.

>Someone else may nab her up. Maybe not.
I'm not sure what you're trying to say with this. I mean, yeah, sure, people may pick her, I'm just saying I'm really surprised that it's supposed to be one of the popular choices.

>>53906163
If I can waifu my arch enemy, I'm all on board.

>>53906273
Assuming even distribution, the majority of people would be born on or after the 16th.

>>53906352
Oh, but there's a near even number of months that end on the 30th and one that ends on the 28th, pushing the averaged age closer to 15.

>>53906185
>If your judgement is to disregard her as a candidate, then you don't have to pick her.
Yeah, and I wouldn't pick. Just explaining why people on here have abnormal taste, to say the least.

>>53906240
You certainly have a high bar, anon.

You may be right. This act might put a bad word on her head, especially in a society that takes mentors quite seriously. I doubt she'll get expulsion from the program though, nor would it probably mean she would receive probation.

Misconduct is usually punished in terms of crime-related activities. While this was a highly unprofessional act on her part, it technically wasn't a crime.

>>53906242
Hahah, do you know me, anon?

>>53906260
>>53906273
>>53906298
People do it even if they aren't of legal age yet.

Marie is 25. Cut her some slack... or not. You're the mentor.

>>53906324
I never intended for Marie to be a popular choice, she just happened to be.

You're supposed to judge her based on the character description. If you don't like her, that's fine. Some people apparently are fine with her. You just seem to be the kind of mentor who intolerates that sort of behaviour.

But you are certainly wrong by calling her an alcoholic, anon. What Marie did may be stupid, but alcoholism is a completely different problem.

>>53906374
Fair enough.

>>53906386
Public drunkenness actually is a crime, SDA.

>>53906397
It's a crime of you're actually in public and being disruptive, like bothering other people or vomitting places where you shouldn't be.

Good thing Marie wasn't doing any of that.

>>53906432
Fairly sure she had to walk to the interview, and I would consider being excessively drunk and irritating the interviewer and myself with her drunken ramblings and poor excuses to be bothering people.

>>53906364
Learn to math. If every month had 30 days, there'd be an even split between 1-15 and 16-30. So half the people would be born before the 16th, and half on or after the 16th. But there's seven months with 31, and one with 28 and change. Which means the average month has more than 30 days, so the average person is more likely to be born on or after the 16th.

>>53904404
>>53904258
>being this much of a prude

How does it feel to take stupid shit seriously?

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>>53906469

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>>53906485

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>>53906163
>start off with 0 points
Ill-advised, my friend. Otherwise it sounds like a good concept and kind of what I had in mind once. Hope it'll work out, cyoas are a lot more work than you anticipate.

>>53906216

>>53906163
>a villain who is being hunted for whatever you did
Presumably you get to pick what heinous deeds you've done, and the list would include options such as jaywalking, littering, loitering, stepping on the grass, etcetera?

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>>53904741
You're a tricky little shit, ain't ya?

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>>53906502

>>53906453
She probably wasn't bothering anyone else, though.

By all means, anon. Report her to the authorities. They probably won't really care and fine her a small fee for misconduct at most.

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>>53906519

>>53906386
>I doubt she'll get expulsion from the program though
I mean, it probably depends on how seriously they take their program, but I know of a master's student who got expelled after getting wasted at a social function that the university planned and which some relatively prominent people attended. I'm not even talking harassing anybody or something like that.
I personally really can't imagine going drunk into an interview with a at least somewhat respected person and not getting at least quite heavily punished.

>>53906453
Good thing you're not the police, because "I personally find this person annoying" is a shitty standard for public intoxication. Most of the time you have to be an active public nuisance, like being loud and boisterous, blocking the roads, or trying to pick fights.

>>53906468
>How does it feel to take stupid shit seriously?
If generals had banners, this'd be ours

>>53906554
See >>53906541

>>53906541
I wouldn't go to an interview in a highly revealing outfit either, but no-one's complaining about Penelope.

>>53906541
This wasn't a university-planned event nor was the interview made known to her until a couple hours prior. This was her birthday on her day off.

She made the decision to arrive at the interview because she thought she could play it off. Obviously, she couldn't, even though she tried to sober up already.

>>53906562
Ok? We're talking about whether or not it's a crime, not whether or not her university would expel her. Universities don't need to follow criminal standards.

Although I'd argue the reason >>53906541 can think of a specific example is because it's an unusual event. If people always got expelled for getting drunk at events you wouldn't need to say "I can think of this specific time this happened," you'd say "this happens all the time."

>>53906604
You seem weirdly defensive of this girl.

>>53906596
If I thought it'd help I would. If I thought it'd help I'd wear a banana hammock.

>>53906637
SDA is an autist, just like the anon he's arguing with, no surprises there.

>>53906637
>>53906663
I'm not allowed to attempt to clear misconceptions?

>>53906596
Fashion's supposed to be more forgiving in this setting, even in terms of the level of revealingness. Tried to represent that with the way they all dressed.

>>53906693
SDA, I think the bigger issue is why the French drunk isn't chain smoking, unshaven, eating smelly cheese, and insulting the reader for not being French.

>>53906386
>But you are certainly wrong by calling her an alcoholic
If she's she's not an alcoholic then why put the arriving drunk thing in? You could have expanded on her personality in other ways that didn't leave the impression of her being seen to being shitface drunk wherever she goes.

It's an unresolved Chekhov's gun. I'm not saying theres anything wrong with her, but including the drunkenness isn't an important factor to her personality, It was just an unlucky event which explains nothing about who she is.

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Is that clearer?

Also, I'll probably specify how many slots of each tier each hull has, instead of a flat limit, just to give them more character. It would make weapon mount option pretty good, I think.

>>53906738
By clearer I mean what you have to do as a player.

>>53906693
I don't mind about the fashion, was just trying to point out that anons seem to be picking on one student and not the other when both seem to have tried to get each other into trouble.

>>53906386
>But you are certainly wrong by calling her an alcoholic, anon. What Marie did may be stupid, but alcoholism is a completely different problem.
I think you have me confused for someone else, because I never mentioned that. I definitely dislike it, but it's not an absolute deal breaker or anything for me. It's rather that her entire introduction, instead of with the others giving some more insight who they are, is just this drunk shtick. I mean, I can understand looking beyond that if there were some other interesting things about her, but we basically don't know anything about her besides some really basic information. She could be an interesting character, but as it stands, I don't see it at all. I'm not condemning people for liking her, but I definitely think it's questionable.

>>53906749
Because being a drunk is an extremely serious problem for her character and eclipses every other thing about her in the interview.

>>53906757
>>53906737
Are you my clone or something?

>>53906738
Sure

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>>53906184
>Make sure to have god tier waifus to rape
>or to love
I will try my best.
>>53906216
There is going to be a love room too Maybe, or something close to it

>>53906199
If the combat system makes it to the final version, then that would mean defeat. However, you can go pick fewer things in order to keep the arch enemy at a decent level.

>>53906241
>>53906257
>>53906340
Will do.
But remember, enemies are for killing and not for hand holding

>>53906504
I'm going for 0 as a starting line because the balance is supposed to come from the arch enemy. So, if I gave the player free points, then they would have an advantage, while if I gave made them start owing points the CYOA would be too punishing.
Tho I may be missing something here. What is the usual problem with 0 points?

>>53906506
I guess I phrased it in a very weird manner. Anyway, backstory is going to be up to the reader. If you don't want to bother with it, just don't, if you like to invest in more context, you can give it some of your own.

>>53906184
>>53906241
>>53906307
On the combat system, the idea behind it is to make the CYOA a bit more engaging. Though I might end up dropping it if I can't really balance it out. It should work more as a quick test of your build at the end of the CYOA rather than a big mechanic that you have to think around it.

And thanks everyone for the tips. If anyone wants to add anything I will be lurking here for a while.

>>53906774
You're assuming I'm not drunk while I'm interviewing her.

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>>53906683

I'll go with the basic 9.

>Chainmail
For mass production
>Full Plate
For myself and any particularly well paying clients
>Fetish
Maid outfits. I don't need a reason.

>Eternal
>Youth
>Resistance
Primarily for me and my fullplate, but I'm willing to provide eternal and resistance to those paying for indestructible anti magic armor; I'd be careful who I give youth too and wouldn't advertise it.

>Coin Operated
I'd keep the cost fairly low, but even a small force equipped with magic chainmail that had to pay me regularly would get me rich quick.
>Password
Mostly as a safety measure in case anyone in my armor turned on me.
>Arousal
For the maid outfits.

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>>53906631
>kitsune
>are always female

kys weaboo

>>53906774
And a student insinuating that she doesn't always wear panties isn't also a serious problem?

>>53906793
>Will do.

I mean, don't make em all waifus; having a good mix of character and temperament in the nemesis's would be ideal, but a few waifu options wouldn't hurt either.

>>53906810
>male kitsune
No, anon, you are the weeaboo.

>>53906817
If you want to fug her, not it's not.

>>53906793
>Tho I may be missing something here. What is the usual problem with 0 points?
Speaking from my own opinion, I prefer to have some leeway with points without any obligations tied to it. Speaking in general; we're an entitled bunch.

Also maybe an option for anons to take the role of a hero/nemesis? May be interesting.

>>53906810
In actual Japanese mythology a kitsune taking a male form would be highly, highly unusual.

>>53906817
No, that's just good practice. Undergarments interfere with thaumaturgy, and I like a girl who comes prepared for some practical demonstrations.

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>>53906793
>renamed rape room into love room

>>53906757
>>53906737
There's only so much you can represent in a character. What do you think would have made her more interesting in terms of points? I think I could've made her talk a bit more about her academics, but to be honest, I kind of ran out of space.

She's supposed to be a risky character. You're supposed to take her word that she didn't mean to make such a bad impression and that she really does live up to her 3.8 GPA. I guess I'll keep her in mind for the rewrites.

>>53906631
>Air Elemental
Free food everywhere and presumably immortality.
>Illusion Magic
>Portal
>Animal Companion (some kind of magical bird that can keep up with my while exploring the skies)

>>53906793
>Tho I may be missing something here. What is the usual problem with 0 points?
Not sure what that particular anon's problem with it is, and without knowing the options to choose from I can't say whether I have a problem with it or not, but you might want to consider having a few difficulty modes to choose from (like >>53905826 does). As such, the modes could go either way (some grant more points, others start you off with a deficit, with the baseline option of 0 to start with).

>>53906868
He didn't, though, he just said that both are going to be options (probably).

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>>53906854

>Common forms assumed by kitsune include beautiful women, young girls, elderly men, and even young boys. Sometimes young adult males

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CHOOSE YOUR FLUFFY

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>>53906884

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>>53906115
I do not know who you are, but I am grateful for any chance to see the majesty of Shogi Chuuni.
You're good people.

>>53906793
>What is the usual problem with 0 points?
Generally, cyoas that start you off with 0 points end up being balanced in such a way that you're forced to take crippling drawbacks, multiple nemeses, or cost-reducing flaws in what few things you can afford.

Outside of sub fetishism cyoas where the whole point is being forced to take drawbacks, cyoas that start with 0 points are invariably poorly balanced and readers get the sense that there's no way to succeed without suffering a bunch of distasteful options.

>>53906793
>I'm going for 0 as a starting line because the balance is supposed to come from the arch enemy. So, if I gave the player free points, then they would have an advantage, while if I gave made them start owing points the CYOA would be too punishing.
>Tho I may be missing something here. What is the usual problem with 0 points?

That sound fine to me; I like a bit of risk/reward in my CYOAs.

>>53906904
Why would I ever not choose the mystery box for this one?

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>>53906904
Mystery box IF YOU DARE

>>53906925
Next time I post this, mystery box will be a savage beating

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>>53906907

>>53906901
Unusual, not unheard of senpai.

Are you pulling from fucking wikipedia?

>>53906926
>8 tails in pic
So, is the 9th one my massive, throbbing futadick?

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>>53906912
Picking between her and Futuba was the hardest choice for my playthrough; I'm glad I went with shogi chuuni though.

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>>53906947

>>53906631
>Kitsune
>250 years
plz

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>>53906968

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>>53906967
I was literally rolling on the floor trying to choose between her and Puffy Shorts.
I went Puffy Shorts, but I'm definitely going for Hifumi next playthrough.

>>53906995
Have you spent any time in school since wikipedia was created? Including college.

>>53906945
That's not how you spell "a fluffy laifu with two fluffy waifu".

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>>53906900
>You can upgrade same room the be both rape and love room, only entrance is different

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>>53907006
Beauty Thief just came a little too late for me, along with that skill gate to continue her Social Link. She's my number 3 girl from that game though.

>>53906968
>Turn yourself into a polar bear by accident.
>Shorten your lifespan by 50 fucking years.
>Well over the age a polar bear should be living in the first place.
>Don't turn yourself back as fast as possible.
Is Big Cola retarded?

>>53906880
I'm not either of them, but if you do plan to rewrite it, all I would really need is for her to at least make an attempt to actually perform the interview, as broken and disjointed as it would be for someone attempting to remember their rehersed introduction while completely shitfaced.

As it is, she's just making excuses throughout the whole thing.

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>>53903746
Spectacle: Suppress
Direct Control: Upgrade
Possession: Long Con
Training: Proxy

Valkyrie
Hunter
Stalker
Infiltrator
Lieutenant

>be student
>come home from tiring day
>step into bathroom
>stalker.jpg
>mfw

>be police chief
>recent stalker attacks
>require all lights to be on
>no more stalkers
>we're safe
>kiss wife
>infiltrator.jpg
>mfw

>be president
>talking with generals
>armed guard acting suspicious
>pew pew pew
>infiltra- wait a second, he was a normal dude
>ohshitwhatdidyoudo
>general acts panicked, then smiles and shoots everyone
>lay dying
>last words "fucking infiltrators"
>"What are you talking about?" as general shoots himself
>wtf is going on
>mfw

>be mayor
>stalker threat high
>gather everyone in one lit place, arm them
>let no one in without heavy interrogation
>wesafenow
>suddenly in the distance
>SKREEEEE
>fukkin horde of hunters
>untrained gunners hit more friendlies than hunters
>mfw

This is how I fight a war. Not through brute force, not through surprise attacks, but simply by removing trust from the equation. Paranoia reigns, people having to constantly live in lit places. Then once it reaches a maximum, this happens.

>be guard
>guarding wall
>new community, flat space, lit at all times, surrounded by wall
>anyone who gets too close shot on sight
>no stalkers, no infiltators, wall too high for hunters
>hear something late at night
>look up
>fucking valkyries
>yell to comrades, we shoot some down
>drop into city
>mfw they were each carrying hunters

There you have it. Every little advantage they think they have is gone eventually, every countermeasure is nullified. By now, half the killcounts would be by vigilantes who try to root out infiltrators, or just plain suicides by people who can't bear the paranoia. I can live amongst humans through infiltrators or glamours, and if I'm bored of that I can just play as a stalker.

>>53907020
>The rape room has a variety of bondage implements, those contrived hentai-drugs that can do anthing from increasing libido and sensitivity to making someone lactate or grow a dick, and a fuck machine with the dildo made out of the crippling weakness that drains the heroine's powers.
>The love room is exactly the same, but it has romantic candle lighting.

>>53906833
Don't worry, I don't want this to turn into a waifu CYOA. Is just another option on it (which would have happened anyway because I also like waifus and we need to put the rape room to use).

>>53906848
>>53906915
I guess it makes sense, but since we have 3 fronts in which you can balance your points (You, dungeon and enemy), I think there is enough room to breathe as long as you're not too greedy. Though, as long as it's not punishing, I personally prefer CYOAs that force me into thinking about my choices, rather than getting everything I want without any drawbacks.

>>53906868
You mean, you don't like some lovingly, passionate raping?
Also, >>53906900 get's it.
Tbqh tho, I think I won't put restrictions in what you can do in the love room or in the rape room, only change the apparatus inside and how it can affect who you capture. The rest I will leave to the reader's kinkiest desires.

>>53907139
>The rape room has a chair that prevents the heroine from pulling away when you sit next to her and hold her hand.

When should I start making a second page? I'm approaching 1300x9000 and I'm still below 6mb. How long per page is 'too long'?

>>53907336
I don't think you can post something over 10k pixels.

>>53907336
Depends on how much more you have to go. I like breaking mine up into roughly equal pages, rather than having on 1200x9000 page and one 1200x3000 page or whatever. Or if theres an appropriate page break based on a new set of options (like one page for character building, one page for companions, etc)

>>53907336
Iirc, for regular cyoas, the cutoff is 10k in length.

Note that if your cyoa is a lewd one, each page needs to be under 4mb so that it can be posted on /d/

>>53907384
>if your cyoa is a lewd one, each page needs to be under 4mb
Needs my ass. Not everyone wants their CYOA posted in that shithole and plenty of lewd CYOAs have been made for here.

>>53907423
he meant lewd pics you dummy

>>53907499
He said lewd CYOA.

>>53906880
I don't feel like I can really give concrete advice, because I'm not really sure what kind of character she is supposed to be. Just anything that would give a better feel of who she really is supposed to be. Give me some background info or something that reflects who she is and not what just happened. Having her do her interview drunk is fine, just don't make it completely about the being drunk, because her character basically becomes 'the person who is drunk in an interview', which really isn't that interesting in my opinion. In the end we don't even know what she normally is like personality wise (besides 'hides herself behind a veil of competence').

>She's supposed to be a risky character
That's perfectly fine. I think the idea is fine, the execution just fails in my opinion, because not only does she offer a risk which the other characters don't, but also because she actually offers less than other characters as is. Unless someone is just really, really into board games (which isn't that unlikely on /tg/ I guess, but even then it's possible that personalities don't match up), I don't see what would motivate people to think that it's worth to take the risk.

>>53907542
>Unless someone is just really, really into board games
This is /tg/, and we're completely starved for waifus. Everyone makes /v/ waifus or /a/ waifus or /fit/ waifus or /k/ waifus, but /tg/ waifus are such an afterthought that we'll take the drunk as long as she's up for Catan.

>>53906880
Honestly, I think the biggest problem is that due to the nature of cyoas, we will never get any form of resolution. In a more interactive medium this would be fine, because after making the choice you could be told what she is like, but as it is, she is basically a mystery option that won't ever get revealed. I have no desire to even imagine any kind of 'builds' including her, because I would have to basically make all her core personality up and at that point, why even play the cyoa?

Also, the information density is really low in her text. It makes sense considering she is supposed to be drunk, but that doesn't make it any more fun to read.

>>53907598
It's pretty weird now that I think about it. You get the occasional companion who is a nice dm or something like that, but otherwise there's not much. Still, one short line saying "favourite pastime: boardgames' shouldn't have that much effect, right?

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>>53903622
>suffer at the hands of unethical scientists
>decide to take revenge, but on who?
>not the scientists
>not their bosses
>not the government or whatever organization was giving them funding
>but on every man, woman, and child on the face of the Earth
It's awfully hard for me to sympathize with genocidal maniacs.

>>53907798
I think it's just proof that CYOAs don't belong on /tg/, and they're just here because everyone else pitched a fit and we're too chill.

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>>53906163
Can't the hero and I just talk through our differences over a small meal?

I swear this is all a misunderstanding. If you think about it, eating meat is bad for your digestive system so I did that village a huge favour by eating all their cattle for them. Sure, I might have soured relationships when I stole and ate the wedding cake and that lavish buffet at that orc-elven wedding but we all know how difficult having sex with a full stomach can be so in a way I saved their wedding night. Yes, kidnapping the princess until the King removed his ban on sugar was questionable but don't you think the children of the kingdom are entitled to candy?

Just come and sit down with me. I cooked this beef with this nifty flaming orb I borrowed from a nearby temple. A-at least now we know it still works and its fire is really divine! Just like this flavour. Yummy.

>>53907812
Governments are given authority by their people. The fact that these experiments were allowed to go on is proof that the people as a whole didn't care.

>>53907848
Where do you think they belong though? /qst/ was created for this kind of threads yet CYOAs are not Quests by definition.

>>53907542
>>53907637
Information density is part of the problem because I had attempted to make her explain her situation in the text box given while drunk. I will admit, for most of them, that I focused more on speech pattern than information exposition, but in her case, it was a matter of running out of space.

I like the way she introduces herself and her current situation. I spent more time writing her than I wanted to though, but that's cause it's hard for me to write a drunk person trying to keep their composure while explaining themselves, and failing. But you're right, that isn't enough. I think I might just make bigger text boxes but that would mean I'd have to add more to the other descriptions, which I don't mind. I'm going to try and make her sound more intelligent.

Originally she was at 4.1 GPA, but I thought that was too much. She was originally more bitchy, too.

>>53907870
Remember that your typical hero would have gone through every container, barrel and locked chest in your stronghold on the way to see you and stolen anything that was even remotely valuable. This will include any rare foods that you might have been saving for a later date.

>>53907870
Eat yourself.

>>53906793
The combat mechanics will probably be utterly annihilated by player creativity. They'll find ways to fuck their nemesis up you didn't ever think of implementing mechanics for. Remember the piss bomber? Are you prepared for that?

>>53908003
>>53908056
Please don't respond to avatarfags. It's the only way they'll learn.

>>53907423
>that shithole
If by "shithole" you mean "place that consistently has more builds being posted, more constructive discussion, and less namefags and avatarfags shitting up every thread with their autism, then yes, I suppose that statement is correct.

>>53905963
That's hard to believe. Maybe some people just like taking advantage of drunk girls.

>>53906912
ZBG, you're tripping again. Reminder that you should avoid that when not posting your work, people don't like it.

>>53907870
What if the hero tells you that you have to work off your debt with hard labour

>>53907283
My god, now we need a way to have a fancy dinner with her at the same time and my evil scheme is complete.

>>53908125
Go back then if the only thing you care about is futa and cocksucking.

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>>53908143
From my understanding, the people that took her or were considering her as a candidate were willing to overlook her mishap because she has one of the highest GPAs. In comparison to other students, I also imagine it's because she's one of the older ones.

>>53908125
It's a sad truth that /d/ is way more civil than a board that has 'Be excellent to each other' as a rule.

>>53908360
Mama never taught me how to be excellent.

>>53907981
>4.1 GPA
Wait, what? I'm not a burgerland guy, so I thought a 4.0 GPA was already literally perfect.

I think emphasis on her smartness or whatever could have helped, because as it is she is just one of the 'high gpa' options with less going for her than the others and I say that as someone who likes her 'character basis' the most.
Expanding the intros would definitely be nice imo. Just keep in mind that you don't really have to emulate a realistic drunk speech or anything if that just makes the character less interesting/fun. At least, I think you shouldn't.

>>53908118
Please report them so they can't post.

>>53908410
Probably perfect grades and some kind of special extra credit assignment like sucking off a tranny.

What are the qualities of a good cyoa in your opinion?

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>>53908456
They let me forget.

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>>53908456
Good powers that allow a variety of fun builds, something to protect, baddies to wreck, ruins to explore, treasures to find, places to relax, and supportive waifus.

>>53903944
Ah yes, my one favourite, just because its so simple. I like to think that this fits into Supernatural universe. So I play like its part of that.

I choose Patricians. I have Angels, lets say 20, thats enough for starters. Feels about right, as I start from the bottom.

I will bring apocalypse through mingling of human ingenius and angelic powers. I choose to be bestowed with Magic.

I will have own heavens garden as sanctum, learn magic, I will train my angels to use modern weapons, will fuse their smite into ifles, angelic blades will be made into bullets, pentagrams of protection into vests, crystals of soul-binded energy grenades. I will make pact with lesser demons to incite civil war in Hell. Minor city circled with soul devouring hexagrams so I can siphon energies into me and my servants. Nuclear bombs fused with souls teleported by angels into Hellscape cleansing the cities there.

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some simple oc

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>>53908456
Requirement to think about your action an build, not just a 'pick the best options'. Viability of multiple builds, not a 'best practice' that's literally perfect. The possibility for choices to synergize, even if you don't spell it out and let the players find these themselves. Interesting setting/world, a good reason to do shit and if you include characters, please don't create waifus. If you have female characters people will waifu them anyway, so write the best people you can, instead of fetishes with faces.

>>53908410
What I attempted to deliver with her intro is her situation and why she's like that; I put that over exposing her character.

I think I can condense her current intro a little bit for more personality stuff, but I think it does its job at what I intended for. So I'm just gonna make the text space bigger.

And yeah, I meant 4.0.

>>53908451
Nah, 4.0 is the highest.

>>53908410
>Wait, what? I'm not a burgerland guy, so I thought a 4.0 GPA was already literally perfect.
In burgerland, some advanced courses have GPA scales that are shifted upwards by 1 point to reflect the increased difficulty of the coursework and tests.

It's less common in universities, but high schools tend to have quite a few of the classes, or allow you to take college courses while in high-school as if they were such classes. In my graduation year, there was one student with a 4.6 GPA because he took almost nothing but the advanced classes and cut out any non-mandatory regular classes that could drag his GPA down.

>>53908540
Cockroach.

>>53908456
Immortality.
Interesting powers.
Different possibilities with no clear best choice.
Means of 1488.
Dimensional or interstellar travel.

>>53908562
That's a weighted GPA. See >>53908561

My mistake.

>>53908456
They spark the imagination. I like ones which make me envision the world which they create, and make me want to discover all the secrets which are only hinted at in the CYOA.

>>53908587
>Immortality
>Dimensional or interstellar travel
These aren't things that make a CYOA good. These are just powertripping wankery that doesn't fit every context. What the hell kind of fiction do you read for it to require these things for you to enjoy? Do you look at something like Scooby Doo and call it shit because the main characters aren't immortal?

>>53908561
>What I attempted to deliver with her intro is her situation and why she's like that; I put that over exposing her character.
I think that only really works if you're consistent with it. The same goes for world building during character intros. If you cram the description of one character full of it, they are just going to feel flatter and less tangible than others.

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>>53908540
mothgirls 4 lyf

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>>53908587
>Means of 1488.

I have fun trying to figure out how I would bring about a homeland for my people, that's free from (((their))) influence, in relevant CYOAs.

>>53908675
>and make me want to discover all the secrets which are only hinted at in the CYOA
Honestly, I really prefer if it's somewhat spelled out in the cyoa. Otherwise it's basically going to be a unsolved mystery forever. Just going with 'my own solutions' feels wrong.

>>53908456
>adventure cyoas
interesting companions
when the player doesn't get imba powers from the start
slightly complex mechanics but no minmaxing
>waifu cyoas
interesting setting so its not just 'random stuff happened so you gotta pick a waifu oh and take this immortality too because why not lmao'
Detailed descriptions of waifu personalities. Short descriptions are bad but it's also annoying when 2/3 of the waifus description is about some barely relevant event from her past
>waifu builders and power cyoas
when they're not posted

>>53908707
You know that the characters from scooby doo haven't aged, right?
Also, I personally like the idea of adventuring forever.

Should the main planet of my CYOA have one region/continent made up of floating islands, or should I save it for the expansion where you'll get an overview of various other planets and just have a floating island planet there?

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>>53908456
Lore.

Lore is one true thing I can rely on in a cyoa. I doubt there are other lorefags in /cyoag/ though.

Feels bad man.

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>>53903345
Infantry squad has a typo, it says "your second-in-command in competent enough"

>1
Alraune
Harvest

>2
Fortune

>3
Light melee (1)
2xTanks (34)
Service Personnel (16)
7xInfantry Squad (49)

>4
Sarah Goodman

This is all about holding the line and protecting mankind, by providing food and having an innate danger sense I'll be able to alleviate a bit of the stress and horror. Ill suited for rapid deployment obviously, but such is the life of civilian protection. The mixture of food supplies, medical supplies and protecting your kinsmen should be more than enough to keep moral in top condition.


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>>53903568
>>53903712
We only need one more to have a group of 4

>>53908540
Caterpillar I guess.

>>53908741
I'm the reverse. I view CYOAs as a device to give my imagination structure, but ultimately that structure is only the starring point. If everything is spelled out then there's nothing for me to do, and I get bored.

>>53908770
Allow me to supplement you: Good, consistent lore.

>>53908727
Wouldn't it be awful living in a world where you can't just blame the Jews for your personal failures?

>>53908833
I mean, I don't want everything set in stone either. I definitely like my imaginative freedom. It's just that I think this is better for vague things than for specifics characters or events.

>>53908741
>Just going with 'my own solutions' feels wrong.

Just do it!

post a good cyoa right now

>>53908885
assume that the ambigous has been left ambigious and un-specified in purpose for the reader to come up with their own ideas

>>53909329
There are none.

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>>53909329
Monster's Den hasn't been edited for prudish boards yet, so I can't post it.

>>53909375
I'm planning on editing it for /tg/ in the next few days anon, so I'll post it here when that happens.