/cyoag/ - CYOA General

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>>51122023
And NOW we're done Battlemage.

Technically I'm done the CYOA but it still feels like there's so much to do.

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>>51122037
Still taking more characters?

>>51121974
Kalana Ahamkara "Smoke"

>Race
Khif
>Mark
Hunter
>Tertiary Attributes
Clarity, Agility, Mind
>Armor/Etch
Battlemage
>Weapons
Sabre + Wand x2
Shield Catalyst
>Spells
Flame Unlock (25 coins)
Flame Weapon (24 coins)
Dragoon Armor (23 coins)
Cloud of Smoke (22 coins)
Conflagration (21 coins)
Flame Skates (20 coins)
Cauterize (19 coins)
Dragon Fire (18 coins)
Nova (17 coins)
Dragoon (16 coins)
Shadow Unlock (15 coins)
Shadow Weapon (14 coins)
Obscurity (13 coins)
Vorpal (12 coins)
Illusion (11 coins)
Fear Drinker (10 coins)
Shadow Jump (9 coins)
Shade (8 coins)
Shade Meld (7 coins)
Dark Shards (6 coins)
Paranoia Poison (5 coins)
Dark Shard Storm (4 coins)
Umbra (3 coins)
Abyssal Shades (2 coins)
Magma Torrent (1 coins)
Nocturne (0 Coins)
>Guild
Ciraezian Marauders
>Companions
Mouse (Physical Skill up by 2) (19 coins)
Bartholomew Zeke (14 coins)
Sera Degala (10 coins)
Bizienne Isouda (6 coins)
Eri Zivienne (0 coins)
>Quests
Search and Rescue
Cinderling Dungeon
Hunted
Defiant
>Rewards
Raptor
Tyrant
Drake
Dragon

Hailing from the Khif homeland across the sea, Annika originally came as a mercenary. She stays for the joy of unrestrained combat against the Detritus and the vindication of fighting for a righteous cause. Eschewing the traditional stealth of shadow mages, she uses her spells to disorient and confuse her foes with flame, smoke, and shadow before blitzing from all angles, bursting forth from the choked air in a flurry of flaming blades.

>>51122054
You don't have to repost your build, I will just look through the archives.

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>>51122061
Unrelated, I just felt like reposting. I slightly changed the name anyway.

>>51122061
Where's the custom weapon cyoa?

>>51122037
>I'm done the CYOA

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>>51122176

>>51122233
>wanted to make a build with all and only weapon etches
>only 6 slots, max
>all most enough mana crystals for all of them

>>51121974
I'm hoping that any updates, or at least some, that you decide to make will give us the chance to submit more builds. Do you feel there's a decent possibility of that?

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Anyone got Domain Master?

>>51122304
I'm still taking in builds for another release of the Cylorian Battlemage add-on, but I'm probably not going to complete it until tomorrow, it seems. So, you have until then.

Again, I want to discourage people submitting multiple builds because I want everyone to have a chance to get in.

A picture, name and slight description would help me immensely. Also, the canon of these are subjective, but most of the builds seem canon-acceptable to me.

>>51122233
Anyone else feel like taking a flailed long staff and attaching 6 great broad blades? Whole thing would have to be made of leafmetal but in the war of "I wield unwieldy weapons so I must be good" we would be champions.

>51121929
>Wait, is there any other character with Shadow/Flame as their combo?

Abby

>>51122357
Yes you are taking more, but your desire not to post more than one is why I'm asking for future opportunities.

Canon? All I know is that OMNI-LAW is best canon. https://youtu.be/ivd8I-lHi1A

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Just starting building my own CYOA. Looking for input as far as readability and format goes. Got some good advice yesterday, implemented it.

How does it look? Any glaring mistakes?

>>51122447
I think you did a pretty nice job anon

>>51122447
Looks okay. I'm actually working on my own shit right now, so the best of luck to both of us.

>>51121974
Why do the constructs die of old age? That seems a little weird, is it just due to wear and tear, which can be negated by repair through things like magical healing, or do their souls forcibly leave their bodies after a certain time like androids from pathfinder? Not a criticism, just curious.

>>51122357
Just noticed, is there any reason why my little "Captain" character had his mark changed?

>>51122488
I don't know the cannon reason but the real reason is so they don't get over picked (they are already fairly popular).

>>51122233
SDA, at what point does a weapon become so heavy/dense you need at least T3 strength to wield it?

>>51122125
>update never

>>51122565
Mostly because you can turn anything into a construct. So anons are using it to make Mud Golems or a sentient shield.

>>51122586
I am really loving the character variety that this brought.

>>51122571
Not SDA but it would also depend on size. A Pure Anomium wand might be a little cumbersome whill a pure Vutrionite great axe would be tremendously hard to deal with.

>>51122565
I would have figured a good way to balance the agelessness of constructs is to make them only functional if constructed from extremely delicate and rare materials, like volcanic glass or something, so they'd be entirely unsuited for close combat unless you minmaxed the hell out of defensive/healing powers.

>>51122488
The bigger question is why Ifraix do.

>>51122619
I had the idea of a volcanic glass construct that only survived melee combat thanks to him using his own flames to keep himself slightly melted, thus having him reform into shape after each hit.

>>51122357
Any that are close to unacceptable?

>>51122619
Most people who want to play them want tough characters though and it would kill most of their appeal to do that.

>>51122447
Looks fine.

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>>51122351
>MODE: Standard

>GENERAL PERKS: Magic [15], Sustained [10], Hybrid [6], True Monster Form [-6]

>GENERAL DRAWBACKS: Muted [-4], Amnesia [-2], Jinxed [1]

>STARTING LOCATION: Daisk [0]

>RACE: Harpy/Elemental (Air)

>HARPY PERKS: Sharp Talons [16], Flight Speed [13], Nest Building [9], Hawk Eye [6]

>HARPY DRAWBACKS: Bad Climate [9]

>ELEMENTAL DRAWBACKS: Weakness [13]

>ELEMENTAL PERKS: Restrain Power [9], Conjure Element [4], Join Element [0]

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>>51121974
>>51108358
>>51111216
Odalia Nikephoros, Human Battlemage with the Mark of the Prophet
>Int3, Mind2, Clarity1, Vitality1, Endurance1
>Wizard Primal Etch
A tattoo really.
>Custom(1)Staff(6)Wand2x(8)
A staff with a wand crafted into a special holding chamber on either end.

Nature Unlock
Vine Control
Snap Traps
Poison Cloud
Divine Unlock
Light Ward
Mending Sparks
Light Chains

Devotee of the Elementalist's Guild, dual membership in Natural and Divine schools of thought and method. Former native of the Naetelyn Desert among nomads.

Often partnered with Elyon "Resonance," as their paired defensive methods have carried a few battlemage teams through their early trials, warding off harm and healing to prevent injuries from impeding the team's efforts.

Novice Mission: Search and Rescue.
The Anp Shamans were notably less of a threat than expected with our teamwork on point. Only one of them had spells potent enough to bypass our defensive means, and it was quickly overwhelmed when its fellows were negated. The real concern was with the flesh masses that they called for, but upon realizing that the poison clouds I had at my disposal also killed the spores, they were quickly neutralized; actual conflict with them was sparing, as most of them were easily held down at a distance. Suggest a purge team confirm the temple clear, then consider it as a forward operating base for other scouting missions.

Gaia's Wrath
Divine Halo
Guardian

Learned a few tricks on the way too. In Wrath form, I can take on a lot of harm from allies via Halo even if I can't reach them fast enough with Guardian.

>>51122712
Well, I mean, that would be the same kind of argument for why they have old age, no? To limit how many people play them over other races, right?

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>>51121974
Hope this got in
Zamuth "Shadow Leap" Nox

>Race
Human
>Mark
Slayer :
>Primary
Strength
>Secondary
Endurance
>Tertiary
Agility
Clarity
Intellect
>Armor
Battlemage
>Weapon
"Moon Slicer" (Khopesh) (5)x2
Blood : 22
Will : 10
Bone : 29
Mind : 15
Density : 21
2 Etch
>Spells
Shadow Unlock
Dark Shard, Paranoia Poison, Dark Shard Storm, Umbra, Oblivion, ShadowJump, Vorpal
>Guild
Ciraezian Marauder
>Companion
Alarik Vanalainen
Abaigeal ni Sithigh

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>>51122756
Intermediate Mission: Denial
Once again, the primary meat and bone of the enemy's forces were handled with relative ease. Low-tier offensive spells shrugged off with wards and mitigated with mending. New Wrath tactic a resounding success, minimal injuries, no casualties on any part of the conflict Elyon and I were deployed to. Architect was another matter, as his spells seemed to match mine, and we were fortunate to have a Wind initiate come along or else the poison-gas conflict might have made it a pyrrhic victory. Eventually the vines and chains snapped, as one of our team managed to sneak through and take the Architect unaware. Spawning point being purged as I write.

Ascension
Root
Gaia's Chosen
Wind Unlock

Sera Degala "Firefox" and Tzuriel Gryn "Sand Pilgrim" added to associates.

Over the course of the mission, particularly when fighting the Archetect, I started noticing little details of its spellcraft and started trying to apply them as we progressed, even with my Divine spells. My Wrath form spell has taken on a great deal of bioluminescence of a sort, seeming an amalgam of Divine and Natural spellweaving now.

After the battle I spoke at length with our Wind adept, promising to take some time to study the air currents and how I might better curve and control my poisons Away from friends and allies. Also met up with one of the other Ifraix members, turns out he's a desert native as well. Easy to get along with as long as you don't bother with too many questions.

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What do you actually look for in a CYOA? What factors lead you to take interest in a specific work, and what things turn you off a CYOA?

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>>51121974
Yuuna
>Race
Human
>Mark
Sentinel (Vitality, Endurance, Strength, Agility, Clarity)
>Armor/Etches
Knight Armor (Knight Etch, Dragoon Armor, Poise, Fortitude, Courageous Light)
>Weapon
Custom Weapon (Unlisted): Tekko (Explosive Blows, Flame Weapon, Weapons of Light, Density)
>Spells
Flame Unlock, Explosive Blows, Dragoon Armor, Flame Skates, Flame Weapon [Novice], Cauterize [Novice], Dragon Fire [Intermediate], Nova [Intermediate], Dragoon [Intermediate]
Force Unlock, Poise, Momentum, Unstoppable Force, Launch [Novice], Density [Expert]
Divine Unlock [Intermediate], Fortitude, [Expert], Weapons of Light [Expert], Mending Sparks [Expert], Light Chains [Expert], Heaven's Fury [Expert], Courageous Light [Heroic], Ascension [Heroic], Demigod [Expert], Light Ward [Expert], Divine Halo [Expert]
>Guild
Ciraezian Marauders
>Companions - I don't want to write out all the stat boosts and when they happened, but after the Expert Quest they're all at A all around.
Danilene Roland
Juliana Angaret
Josphine Balton
Alarik Venalinen
>Quests
Novice: Patrol Zionia
Intermediate: Skirmish
Expert: Reclaimation
Heroic: Sanity - Additional Award: Extra Etching Slots

An oddly cheerful fist-fighter, she seems to have little regard for her own safety in combat. Refuses to retreat from nearly every fight, saying, "Heroes don't back down."

>>51121974
asking again, can undead enthrall titans or detritus prime? or fallen battlemages?

>>51122547
What mark was he? I thought I read he was vanguard, even if I took him for a Prophet-like character. My mistake.

>>51122488
>>51122638
Magic. But seriously, >>51122565

Immortality sucks.

>>51122571
I had numbers but I think I lost them, I'll have to look into it later when I have the time.

>>51122619
I thought of that, but thought it was too limiting. I kept it vague because I wanted people to think what was common sense.

>>51122656
There's a few. One that comes to mind is the shield-construct. I mean, it can be done but there's no explanation for it.

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>>51122778
Expert Mission: Calamity
Nearly made the namesake on this one. Our collective efforts were pushed back, despite having arrived just a day after we got word of the new portal forming. We were within sight of the portal construction when the field sealed the region. Despite our usual defensive superiority, we lost a few of our Knights just getting to the portal's location as it was starting to take form, focused on taking out the Det-Gall before the portal was finalized and started collapsing. Desperate, each of the battlemages and knights still standing began foregoing concerns of later fights, and we managed to fight out way back to the edge and away from what few Detritus had been summoned as well as the remaining guardians. There is a lot to be said for having no regard for anything save survival, but I am not sure if I should be proud of the way our efforts manifested. Either way, we held out at the edge of the sealed area until it came down a few minutes later.

Zephyr
Fling
Mist (Poison Variant)
Vortex
Eye of the Storm

8 blood tokens to bring up associate abilities to A in either regard.

>>51122790
I like power and challenge. I don't care for waifus. I am the minority of /cyoag/.

>>51122796
I'm for immortality not sucking, but if the option is overused as-is even with the limited lifespan, then that's a fair enough choice.

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>>51122819

>>51122757
But the main draw of the races is supposed to be capability, ergo given the choice between a nerf to capability or the secondary (in this cyoa anyway) issue of lifespan the nerf has to go to life span. Not to mention all the creativity that would be lost if the former was the case. Construct builds have been extremely varied based on peoples choice of material.

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>>51122800
Heroic Mission: Annihilate
Alright so nobody panic, it's dead. It cost us dearly as Titan summons usually do, but we've come out alive...for the most part. The plan was to form a poison cloud around the Titan's head to start addling it and maybe killing it but probably just being one of a dozen things all going on at once to take it apart. However, I realized that it was big enough for my Wrathform spell to cause rampant growth over it's facial plates. If it was going to be choked at all by a poison cloud, I thought it'd catch hell for a spontaneous Forrest burrowing into its nose.

Turns out that was an ideal form in the eyes of whatever divine entity there is out there helping us to alter the Ascended Wrathform. I got a much better sense of the living things I was conjuring into the titan's body. Problem is, they were all burrowing and rooting into one of the biggest concentrations of Detritus corruption imaginable, and it started a back-and-forth influence/control fight between myself and the Illuminator.

On the one hand that seemed to have done the job; with the Illuminator distracted it wasn't able to defend itself against several other attacks at once, and the Titan fell well outside of dangerous territory to have a Titan in, aside from them existing at all. On the other....the plants kept growing into it. I can't really get out without worrying that it might wake up again or something, and the whole situation feels grimy and gross somehow. I'm...I'm going to stay here, see if I can't clean some of this up. Maybe that'll make the sick feeling go away.

Apostles
Companion
Alpha Spirit
Nature Servant
Unlock Undead
Summon Undead
Relentless Charge
Thrall

>>51122796
Ifraix aren't even popular now. I doubt many people want to be immortal skeletons.

>>51122796
>What mark was he?
I chose hunter, it seemed like the best for a fleet footed kinda character

>>51121974
Vrejes Norne

Khif
Prophet
charisma
clarity
precision

wizard

Hybrid magitech violin and rapier
shield catalyst

everything in acoustic

frost unlock
cryo shot
shatter
flash freeze
glacial absolution
jormungandr's charge
frozen heart
ice permeance
comet
obsidian ice

order of the cobalt muse

heavens lance
mage breaker
asunder
battle maiden

runic expedition
excellence
hunted
sanity
Dragon mount

how many words do you need the description to be?

>>51122861
Ifraix aren't immortal, they live three times as long as a human.

>>51122884
I know. I am responding to his reason why Ifraix aren't immortal.

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>>51121974
Lady Liadrin
"God's Sight"
Ifraix

Prophet
Clarity
Precision
Agility
Wizard Robes

Bow
Dagger x2
Knight Sword
Buckler

Divine1
Weapons Of light2
Courageous Light3
Fortitude4
Light Ray5
Consecrate6
Judgement7
Lightward8
Divine Halo9
Guardian10
Mending Sparks11
Light Chains12
Heaven's Fury13
Ascension14
Purge15
Apostles16
Demigod17
Wind Unlock18
Wind Weapon19
Air Burst20
Wind Slash21
Time unlock23
Haste24
Post-haste25
Spell rewind26

Adelphi Paladins
omitting companions for the sake of the build
Hindrance
Horse
skirmish
no mount
Reclamation
Defiant
Dragon Mount

>>51122906
Not bony enough.

>>51122906
> Female Ifraix.

I can't believe it. Science has finally done it.

>>51122924
She cleans up well

>>51122924
>>51122936
>>51122937
Meh a well preserved lich could look all right, and maybe still get it on.

I think I saw a construct build that had an outer flesh layer too.

>>51122972
Yeah, constructs can get pretty wild. I wanted to make an Undead specced Construct that was basically a parasite that killed humanoid enemies, hid inside of them, and then reanimated them with Thrall.

Maybe release Poison Spores with Nature, or make copies of myself with Shadow spells.

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>>51122906
Anyways, Living as a semi immortal sudo-skeleton for 200 years does some weird things to your psyche, and after all that time she decided that she had had enough. Being physically weak aside, she can still help from the rear, and uses superb magic and occasional omniscience to assist in assaults and getting all these damn monsters off my island. In the name of God, of course.

>>51122447
>Any glaring mistakes?
I don't see where I can put my dick into the angel

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>>51121974
Name: Melinda Titania
I was once a legend you know, some towns used my name to scare children.
I want make myself another, and such a convenient target too.
Race: Ifraix
Mark: Forerunner
-Mind
-Intellect
-Precision
Find them in small numbers, then let one escape
Armour: Rogue
-Obscurity
-Petrify : after Expert
-Void Tap: after Heroic
All the better, if they never see me Im doing my job right
Weapons:
-Musket: 6
-Vorpal: after Heroic
-Bow + Sabre: 8
-Shadow Weapon Etch : after Novice
-Double Time : after intermediate
-Vorpal: After Heroic
-Wand + Dagger : 6
-Double Time: after intermediate
Hopefully Ill not need the musket, it would ruin the silent killer illusion
Magic
-Shadow Unlock
-Illusion
-Shadow Jump
-Fear Drinker
-Nocturne
-Umbra
-Nightmare
-Obscurity Etch
Being seen makes the mystery go away, the best scare is one that isnt known
Guild: Dusk Guild
After my own heart
Companions:
-Kali Tsula
Such fun we will have
Novice: Search and Rescue
I suppose hiding people is easy for me, not very fun though
Reward: Raptor
-Shadow Weapon
-Time Unlock
Another layer of deception
-Sula: Magic Up C
-Emiline Oiseaux
Another to help along the legend, I wonder what additions she will give?
Intermediate: Denial
Oh you shouldnt have, a nice little party just for me. The only problem is who to leave running.
Reward: Nightweb
-Spell Rewinf
-Double Time Etch
-Timer
-Dark Shard
Now I can seem to be everywhere, though I only match the legend this time.
I suppose having to live up to the legend makes my job complete doesnt it?
-Beulah Rusil
-Rusil Magic Up B
By this point spreading the legend is tedious, perhaps I just need some time off

Continued

>>51123084
Expert: Hunted
Such a sad end, dont worry Ill be sure to make it quick as I can
Rewards: Not one of those thanks, too big, too noticable.
-Paranoia Poison
-Sequence
-Ouroboros
-Post
-Petrify
This is far too easy now, perhaps Ill take a job in one of their cities see how far my legend has spread.
-Oiseaux Magic Upx3 A
-Rusil Magic Up A
-Sula Magic Upx2 A
-Dameon Caras
At this point theres not much worth in furthering the legend, it has its own life now.
Heroic: Defiant
Very much not preferred, but having their monster slinking about the back will be useful
Reward: Mana Glass
-Arcane Unlock
-Void Stare
-Void Tap
-Void Call
-Mana Burn
-Vorpal Etch
-Shade
-Shade Meld
I suppose Ive made my mark havent I? Perhaps Ill try to set up another legend, would be a nice change at least.

>>51122778
Hi Red.

>>51122795
I hope you're powerful enough. The fact that no TItans have been enthralled yet is probably a testament to the amount of power you need.

As for Detritus Prime, it's more probable.

>>51122861
Actually they're just fine. There's a lot more Ifraix builds than I thought there were, but the point was for them to not be so popular anyways. They, and the constructs, are a rare race after all.

>>51122876
Fair enough, I'll change him to Hunter. My bad, again.

>>51122906
>>51122924
>>51122936
>>51122972
>>51123033
Not too inclined on listing her as an Ifraix with that picture. I'm gonna have to put human until otherwise.

Same thing I did with Angel's build.

>>51123084
>>51123098
This is passable as a female ifraix.

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>>51121974
This was a time of many funs.

Here is shitty commemorations of most glorious dumbness. Have many a nice dream for you.

>>51123191
>Red.
Really?

>>51123239
at least none of those were built for the explicit purpose of raping her.

>>51123191
>Red
I don't actually know the characters I used for most of these. Where's that one from?

>>51123297
Red's someone from /jc/ I wouldn't worry about it.

>>51123276
Yeah, that would be weird.

Still, just imagine her giving that opening speech, or trying, to some of the more "interesting" characters.

>>51123191
do the stroc have any current\ancestral communities or more of a nomadic\nonmajority thing everywhere?

>>51122774
>Mission
Novice Hindrance
Felira Lilikhin
Raptor Mount
Wind unlock, airburst, wind slash
Intermediate Dispelling
Tyrant Mount
Azriel Malakhov
Thunder, Force unlock, Momentum, Unstoppable force
Expert Calamity
Drake Mount
Bruce Ironstark, Mouse
Launch, Mass, Pound, Vortex, Storm Ruler
Heroic Annihilate
Elemental Mount
Pressure, Gale, Whirlwind, Illusion, Fear Drinker, Nocturne

>>51123339
i.e. more associated with any city region in particular that is?

>>51122796
If mortality is caused by magic, can I cheat it with magic?
I've been looking at the undead spells and was wondering if, as one of the two artificial races, were I to attempt to sanguine essence myself after death by old age, since my body is not subject to the same kinds of decay as others, would I be able to continue existing?

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>>51122819
Sweet, thanks.

>AFFINITIES: Air/Acoustics
>SIZE: Large
>RACE: Beast (Gryphon)
>BOSS PERKS: Empowerment [7], Agility Prowess [6], Perception Prowess [5], Magical Prowess [4], Domain Control [3], Morphing (Air/Acoustic Average Bestial(Harpy)) [2], Corruption [1], Charisma Prowess [0]

>MINION RACES: Bestial, Beast
>MINION SIZES: Petite, Average

>MINION PERKS: Devotion [14], Native [13], Appearance (Beautiful) [12], Sustenance [11]

>LIEUTENANTS: Strega the Seer (Average Bestial Oracle) [10], Sirin the Temptress (Average Bestial Witch) [9], Anzu the Windseeker (Large Bestial Champion) [8]

>ELITES: The Harrier Corps (Average Beast Warriors) [7], The Feather Council (Average Bestial Overseers) [6], The Doves of the Rose Room (Average Bestial Harem) [5], The Windcaller Corps (Average Bestial Sorcerer) [4]

>MOOKS: Galewings (Average Beast Guards) [3], Swan Maidens (Average Bestial Recruiters) [2], Hawkeyes (Average Beast Scouts) [1], Stormwing (Average Beast Soldiers) [0]

>REALM PERKS: Protected [2], Restoration [1], Grand Lair [0]

>COMPLICATIONS: Usurper [+5 minion tokens]

>BONUS MINIONS

>ELITES: The Caladrii (Average Bestial Priests) [4], The Cetan Windriders (Average Beast Agents) [3]

>MOOKS: Caladrii Trainees (Average Bestial Clerics) [2], Karura Arcanists (Average Bestial Mages) [1], Shanyang Handmaids (Average Bestial Servants) [0]

Lore in next post.

>>51123314
Aaaand what's /jc/?

>>51123401
Also something I'd wouldn't worry about.

>>51123401
Your child.

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Aaand here are the source files for Battlemage.

Part 1 is six .psd files, each ranging from ~100-400mb. Uncompressed, it's about 1.22GB total. The 7z archive is 384mb:
https://mega.nz/#!kJNhgRLD!o6YKhb7l7cQCX_H5QDxVbgUb_my1mamIzVCI7GHiqiA

Part 2 is 12 .psd files (one per element school), ranging from about ~40-60mb each, coming to about 600mb uncompressed total. The .7z archive is 181mb:
https://mega.nz/#!1Et3VL7Y!JKequtWt3-5BZc-iqA4afgpGe7ZwUt_HaMOs1GThFJQ

And, as a bonus, here the .psd for my build template (pic related). 22.9mb uncompressed:
https://mega.nz/#!FJkV1Yza!RWfdZRnVht2YvDrLqiD4I5pDoTihI76Gqtav81cGMmY

The template's a bit messy but I hope it'll do.

I have also uploaded all of Battlemage 2.0.1 (the .jpgs) onto my mega drive, so you can always find them there. Same with Weapon Forge 2.0.0.

>>51123297
>>51123401
Don't worry about it.

>>51123339
There are areas in the world that are primarily stroc populated. I'd wager several towns are almost purely stroc. But, for the most part, they're nomadic. They're a dying race.

Not in the continent of Ziona, though.

Get re-populating.

>>51123374
That might work, but I couldn't tell you how. I would certainly put some sort of drawback on it, though.

When it came to constructs and ifraix, I thought that magic itself would have some sort of decay to it as well, like radioactive matter. It happens slowly, but surely.

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>>51122877
shit, forgot pic

>>51123423
ok, so spiritual magics could probably have a means of extending artificial race longevity, albeit at the cost of being extremely taxing and requiring a lot of focus (represented by how many spells you have to take to get to that point, weakening your access to the other spells because you're forwarding half of your selection to keeping yourself alive)? Ok, that's an acceptable compromise, will work on a build now.

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>>51121974
Here to purge the lands of heretic scum.

Aethusrial Noblesworn
"Cleansing Force"

>Race
Stroc

>Mark
Slayer (Strength, Endurance)

>Attributes
Agility
Intellect
Vitality

>Armor/Etch
Battlemage

>Weapons
Staff+Polearm (12)
Knight Sword (4)
Shield Catalyst (4)

>Spells
Lightning: Unlock, Plasma Weapons, Energy Harvest, Bolt, Warp, Smite, Snare, Shock Pulse, Shock Force, Mjolnir, Fury Charge, Conduit

Divine: Unlock, Light Ray, Consecrate, Judgement, Ascension, Purge

Force: Unlock, Density, Inertia, Momentum, Unstoppable Force, Launch, Mass, Pound

>Guild: Knights of Dust

>Companions: Juliana Angaret, Lynn Aezyra, Noemi Fahnreich, Vaphriel Fahnreich, Wardric, Azriel Malakhov

>Quests:
Novice: Search and Rescue
Reward: Raptor

Intermediate: Skirmish
Reward: Tyrant

Expert: Reclamation
Reward: Drake

Heroic: Annihilate
Reward: Dragon

Aethusrial desires nothing but the destruction of the Detrius and to rebuild his homeland. Monster slaying just happens to be the icing on the cake.

STROC FORCE UNITE

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>>51121974
Bartholomew "The Bomb" Alexander

RACE:
>Human
MARK:
>Vanguard
>>Agility
>>Endurance
>>Clarity
ARMOR:
>Knight
WEAPONS:
>>x2 Metal Gauntlet + Shield Catalyst

SPELLS:
>>>Flame
>Flame Unlock
>Dragoon Armor
>Flame Skates
>Explosive Blows
>>>Time
>>Time Unlock
>Double Time
>Haste

GUILD:
>Dust Knights

Vying for the title of "Fastest Man Alive", Bart does two things: Go fast, and hit hard.

>>51121974
How do the Musket's shots work?
Does knowing more spells make that type of elemental shot more powerful?
Do we need to know an offensive ranged spell for it to work?

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>>51123239
Many fun, yes?

>>51123499
They don't particularly cast spells and aren't affected by your magic unless you Etch it with something.

The way I envisioned magitech muskets to work was that they worked on a charge, like a battery of mana. It would then fire bolts of concentrated mana like a laser beam, but the battery would have to recharge between shots.

The recharge-between-shots would be your fire rate, and each battery (which can be seen as a magazine, or what would be in the magazine) would give you a certain amount of shots.

Things like barrel length would give you better range, certain receivers would give you different benefits (bolt action versus semi-auto), so on.

>>51123530
Keep going.

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>>51123530
I am enjoying these

>>51118496
he's dead jim

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Millicent "Dragonflight" Bystan

Charge and Ride! His head filled with legends of old and a gravedigger father's lectures on last rites, Millicent fervently seeks to bring an eternal end to the Detritus, eternal glory to his family, and eternal rest for the innocents slain during the incursion.

>Human
>Vanguard: Strength, Intellect, Vitality, Endurance, Agility

>Aegis Armor: Soul Warding Etch, Fortitude Etch
I feel like protection against magic, physical, and mental damage all on one set of armor should be less than possible
>Polearm (Lance): Weapons of Light Etch, Soul Ripper Etch, Void Discharge Etch
CHARGE
>Hybrid Knight Sword/Wand: Weapons of Light Etch, Soul Ripper Etch, Star Burst Etch
For the few situations where a lance is impractical.
>Kite Shield: Weapons of Light Etch, Soul Ripper Etch, Star Burst Etch
It's under weapons, so it gets some etching!

>Undead unlock
>Soul Ripper Etch, Soul Warding Etch, Soul Seeker, Masochism, Life Drain, Ceaseless Etch

>Divine unlock
>Weapons of Light Etch, Fortitude Etch, Mending Sparks, Light Ray, Consecrate, Judgement, Light Ward, Divine Halo, Guardian, Light Chains, Ascension

>Arcane unlock
>Star Burst Etch, Void Discharge Etch, Mana Burn, Mana Chain, Cosmos

>Adelphi Paladins

>Wyoming Pihere (up to A's in both)
>Mikael Ouren (up to A's in both)
>Christof Jurdan (up to B's in both)
>Tanja Lindholm (up to B's in both)
>Idemay Ganleya
you should be noticing a theme here.

>Caravan Guard
We rid- er, walk alongside the caravan, defending it from bandits and Detritus!

>Denial
NOW we ride!

>Reclamation
Ah, the Tyrant. Such noble beasts. More to the point, we have a fortress to restore!

>Defiant
We shall return this city to the innocent and lay the Detritus to their, long overdue, eternal rest.

A-ha! A dragon mount? Truly? Oh, happy day!

This is my second build or whatever, so don't shove it in there if you don't want to.

>>51122906
>>51123191
Perhaps the female Ifraix is wearing someones skin.

As for Angel I don't know her build but can't we just assume she is a stroc.

>>51123423
Hey ƧⱭ∀ Did you see my Build update last thread? >>51120487
I detailed my thought process in the hope that it bump me up to S rank strength and changed a couple spells.

>>51123572
So the muskets aren't actually dependent on the user's personal power?

Can a Battlemage refill the batteries by themselves, or do they need a specialist or something?

>>51123661
Not until she gives me wings.

>>51123611
I would assume he simply made the choice to delay release until BM 2 dies down. A decision I fully support btw, because it allows for a better opening when it happens. Movie studios do it so I guess we are in good company.

>>51123351
Being raised in a land filled with crime and deceit had only taught zamuth one thing "if they can't see you they can't harm you". Born as a slave in an airship full of pirate he only finds comfort in the sky that reach to the corners of the earth. One day after when the airship is right on top of ziona the knight of dusk attacked them. The ship crashed on Mount Srigh. Survived, he was found by the locals where he's treated like family. A few years later he enlisted for the battlemage title, it was then where ciraezir fell to the detritus knowing his adoptive family have been killed by monsters. He vowed to rid the world from it once and for all. Zamuth primarily uses his shadow spells to get the drop on his foes and proceed to slice them with his wind spells. Another tactics is where he uses his wind drake to drop him from the stratosphere only to shadowjump at the point of impact and then launching from the same shadow to give his opponent a bone shattering impact hence the name "Shadow Leap"

>>51123671
I gave the letter grades by eye-balling and from what I thought was appropriate. I'll look over it tomorrow when I begin compiling builds for the new release god forbid there be too many.

>>51123674
I would say that the point of muskets/firearms are that they aren't dependent on the user's ability (apart from physical skill, like aiming and physical handling of the gun).

As for the mana charges themselves, you can probably recharge them yourself but it would require a certain amount of meditation and time to do so. It'd usually more efficient to get a specialist to recharge them.

I'd wager that there are places/workshops around Ziona that trade charged batteries for uncharged ones. Sounds like a good way to make money with the rising use of muskets.

>>51123677
I hope you are talking about the pic she used (or red bull) lol.

>>51123732
Is the weapon add-on going to have Titan Blades added?

>>51121974
Battlemage edition 3

>>51123732
Can't you charge a musket with energy focus?

>>51123732
So with Ouroboros being buffed, will Post be buffed to?

>>51123732
ƧⱭ∀ can i elementalize my alpha spirit?

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>>51123781
Sure.

Also considering doing a trick-weapon upgrade, somehow.

>>51123814
I suppose that works.

>>51123818
I think several minutes of "do anything before dying" is more than adequate for Post.

>>51123839
You can Etch them if you want.

>>51123846
Any reason why weaponforge doesn't have an option for scimitars?

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>>51123530
Dumb fun is best fun, yes?

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Gonna head to bed tomorrow. Hopefully I don't get buried under the expected 25cm of snow.

S-smell you later, /cyoag/.

>>51123870
Moon blades. Those were meant to encompass that whole family of curved swords--scimitars, sabres, cutlass', etc.

>>51123884
Christ.

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>>51123899
>Gonna head to bed tomorrow.
now*

the fuck

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>>51123381
>The Soaring Boughs are so named for the sky islands' resemblance in overall shape to the highest branches of a tree. Their current ruler, the gryphon Gamayun, sits on the highest 'bough' near the empty nest of her 'mother,' who she refers to as the All-Mother or the Queen of the Boundless Blue.

>From her perch, Gamayun commands vast numbers of avian servitors, assisted by her close lieutenants. While many of her scouts and frontline troops are simple avian minions, those meant to serve more civilized purposes were all once humanoid, and have since been somehow twisted to her service. Some suspect that she calls upon her 'All-Mother' to do this, while others assume it to be her own power.

>Of her lieutenants, the most dangerous in a straightforward fight is her Champion, Anzu the Windseeker. Originally an adventuring Orc named Garmlash, he has since grown in size and strength, coming to resemble a black eagle in the shape of a man. His loyalty to Gamayun is absolute - it is likely that she has twisted his mind beyond recovery, but it is unclear why. He still wields his old greataxe, but it has since been infused with the power of the winds, and howls like a gale whenever swung. This howl alone has been enough to put some enemies to flight, and for that reason the axe is now called Bloodscreech.

>As dangerous to the mind as Anzu is to the body, Sirin serves Gamayun with both loyalty and an unhealthy degree of lust. She takes great delight in tormenting those who encroach on her domain until they kneel before her and her mistress in absolute supplication. Her songs both entice and terrify, leading victims to ecstasy, panic, or even despair.

>Strega is the primary clairvoyant of the realm, and nothing within it escapes her eye. She also trains the Caladrii and their aspirants, but prophecy remains her most valued occupation. She is the one who warns of incursions and divines on happenings in other dominions.

(cont)

>>51123899
Thank god I have the day off tomorrow.

But my back is going to ache from all the fucking shoveling.

>>51122805
Challenge? How does that even work? What CYOA has a failure state?

>>51123846
Hey SDA can i really do what i did in this >>51123718 or if you're to lazy to read it all
>wind drake to drop him from the stratosphere only to shadowjump at the point of impact and then launching from the same shadow to give his opponent a bone shattering impact

So basically using unstoppable then intentionally missing the target only to shadowjump into a shadow and reappearing in his foes shadow a few seconds later to give it an uppercut

>>51122790
>look for
Adventure. New worlds or powers that let me live a different life on earth
>turn you off
If the first thing I see when I open the picture is massive walls of text
If the picture is ugly.
Space.
Starting out with picking a waifu.
Companion-based cyoa's.
Mystery-box base cyoa's.

>>51123920
Something made by limeral phineric (can't spell) I am sure...

>>51123899
> Christ.

SDA, some of our builds are complete monsters.

Actually stop and imagine a heavily armoured tank who gets off from Mario-style murder, descending from the fucking sky at hyper-speeds with enough magical power to multiply the kinetic force to unfathomable levels.

Then there's the whole living mass of emotional issues and world shattering rage that is Genocide.

More importantly, imagine a corrupted Battlemage regaining their will to live out of fear of what their successors ARE and ARE going to do.

>>51118365
I look forward to more of this.

>>51123884
> The barely visible COMMANDER OMNI-LAW behind the Battlemages.

>>51123915
Back pains a bitch, but that's what we get for standing upright and shit instead of horizontally like our spines are suppose too

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>>51123914
>Strega is the least dangerous of the three lieutenants in direct combat, but reaching her when she can turn the eyes of the entire realm upon you is no easy feat.

>Despite the numbers of her minions and her powerful lieutenants, Gamayun may very well have bitten off more than she can chew in recent months. An ambitious king is even now sending vast armies in her direction, and rumor has it that his campaign is supported by creatures of flame and iron. Though she initially rejected his ultimatum, many believe that the army marches primarily to prove to her that the king's threats are not empty, and that he would rather not expend the effort of extinguishing her when a show of force could bring her into his confidence.

>The result of the impending war remains to be seen.

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>>51121974
Mazz Gaines "Iron Giant"

> Race:
Human

> Mark
Sentinel (+ Vitality, Endurance)
> Tertiary attributes
Strength, Charisma, Precision

> Armour/Etch
Aegis armour

> Weapons
Polearm (Glaive) (-6)
Tower Shield (-6)
Dagger (-2)
Wand (-4)

> Spells/Etches (19 coins)
Force Unlock
Density (on Polearm)
Poise
Momentum
Unstoppable Force
Launch
Mass with Pound
Divine Unlock
Fortitude
Light ward
Divine Halo
Guardian
Ascension with Apostles
Fire Unclock
Explosive Blows (on shield)
Flame weapon (on shield)
Flame skates
Cauterize

> Guild
Knights of Dust

> Companions (15 coins)
Wardric (-5) - with both skills to S+ (-5)
Elyon (-5)

> Quests:
Fort Defiance (5 mana coins, 10 blood coins, Behemoth mount)
Defiant (6 mana coins, extra etching slots)

"Let them come. Let their armies crash against me like surf against the earth. I will still stand."

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>>51123943
>>51122842
I have no idea what you're talking about. Just some plants and wind stuff dude.

>>51123953
Birds did it right, they don't have all the health problems humans have from it.

>>51123943
SDA is well aware or the height mechanics put in place, the center of the force tree is dedicated to it. It is very probable that it is based on the souls drop attack mechanic (which gave huge dmg boosts).

Not to mention this anon

>>51117484

>>51124043
Holy fuck that is literally what I was going for with the Incredibly Upset Man.

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Postan again.
>race and name
Human, Atrides.
>mark and tertiary attributed
Prophet, Strength, Agility, Clarity.
>armor
Battlemage.
>weapons
Staff+Saber mix, Shield Catalyst +Tower Shield mix.
>Schools of magic
Everything in Divine. Bolt, Siphon, Energy Focus, Energy Barrier, Warp, Mjolnir and Conduit.
>guild
Knights of Alinor.
>followers
Wyoming Pihere, fully boosted to double A stats. Tzuriel Gryn, as well.
>novice
Caravan Guard, Horse mount for Wyoming.
>intermediate
Excellence,Tyrant mount for Wyoming.
>expert
Reclamation, Drake mount for Wyoming.
>heroic
Defiant, two extra glass coins.
>fluff
"Divine Teacher Atrides". A prophet who faces the front line with much gusto and zeal, known for his constant use of the Demigod form provided by ascension. Upon seeing unused talent in one of his companion third battlemages, he took it upon himself to teach his peer the true ways of Divinity, bringing to mind the old traditions of Knight and Squire, if only for a short while. Himself only a lowly man before his journey onto the path of the immortal, the radiance provided by his training has inspired him to share such abilities with all who would want to know. Training was simple, and soon his disciple's abilities were on par with his own, and the duo would make this beautifully known upon the battlefield, as a pair of golden winged seraphs.Later on, during the Great Reclaiming, the two paladins came across the Great Monk himself, and sensing their inherent divinity, vowed to travel with them on their journeys. Together, they are the Three Wise Men.

>>51123915
AHAHA LIVING IN CALIFORNIA DOES HAVE ITS PERKS

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>>51123884
I'm finishing this with some OMNI-LAW motivational images to get you through the day.

>>51124043
Woops... guess Im not as original as I thought

>>51123990 is me

>>51124051
Well it gets my vote for underappreciated post of last thread (1 single reply) that's for sure. I think it is hysterical because it really is most of us force users.

>>51124097
Hell yeah it is. Dude, imagine breaking that siege in that one quest by just doing that and then jumping back up the wall and repeating in like an hour after you've had a snack or something over and over.

>>51124091
Its no prob SDA knew what they where adding when they added it, in a CYOA with mechanics as good as this a lot of us are going to be drawn to the same things. SDA even gave us our own guild (dusk knights) which has been very very popular.

>>51124090
>Spell Grab can be used to arrest spells.

Oh shit.

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>>51121974
>Race, Mark
Construct, Sentinel
>Attributes
Vitality, Endurance (mark)
Mind, Strength, Intellect (tertiary)
>Armor, Weapons
Battlemage, Custom Weapon (Hybrid, Staff/Titan Blade, 7 coins leftover)
>Spells and Etches
Nature:
Unlock, Mend
Undead:
Unlock, Masochism, Life Drain, Sanguine Essence, Ceasless
Arcane:
Unlock
>Guild
Ciraezian Marauders
>Companions
Irial Eamon, Liliana (two letter boosts to her physical skill)

>>51123423
>>51123463
Aight, this is my base build without quest rewards.
I have a story to justify my build progression through the quests, but it was too long to post. Would people care if I posted it, or would that just be taking up unnecessary space?

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>>51121974
Human
Prophet
T1: Intellect
T2: Mind
T3: Agility, Clarity, Charisma
Armor: Battlemage
Weapon: Staff/Staff/Instrument/Instrument/
Acoustic: Unlock, Chiusa, Perserverence, Medley, Cresendo, Rivileo, Fragility, Magi, Opus, Harmony
Time: Unlock, Haste, Post Haste, Stasis, Ouroborous, Possibilities, Stop, Acceleration Charm, Projection
Divine: Unlock, Mending, Chains, Fury, Ascension, Demigod
Adelphi Paladins
Expedition, Excellence, Reclamation, Defiant (2)
Drake Mount
Bliss Mote "The Numerous"
(Acoustic/Time)
There are few battle-mages better to have with your side than Bliss, Her support ability its legendary and she can split into up to ten copies of herself, All capable of (Presumably) sustaining their own magical songs and buffing nearby allies. She excelled in the 3v3 duels of the Arena of Excellence and supported numerous armies in the field of war, pulling off impressive victories despite overwhelming odds with a combination of her supportive focus and prophetic commanding.
She is, however, Not particularly amazing at the 'Battle' part of Battle-magery, being more focused on debuffing enemies than killing them.

>>51124211
POST AWAY!

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>>51121974
Jesus this CYOA is long. I've spent 2 hours on shit and I didn't even realize the time going by. I'll finish the rest in the morning.

>>51124512
Because of how popular LNs are these days, I feel this way every day.

>>51122819
Perks: Expansion, Enchanted, Legendary, Large
Drawbacks: Apocalypse, Malevolent, Downfall, Hero, Nemesis, Usurper (18 Minions)
Affinity: Earth/Illusion/Technology/Wasteland/Arcane
Size: Tiny
Race: Construct/Elemental/Monstrous
Perks: Empowerment, Empowerment, Empowerment, Corruption, Domain Control, Charisma Prowess, Magical Prowess, Hybrid, Hybrid
10
Minions Sizes: Tiny, Large
Minions Races: Monstrous/Humanoid Elemental/Construct
Minion Perks: Devotation, Native, Upgrade, Training
Minions: 5 Tiny Monstrous Humanoid Archmages, 5 Large Elemental Construct Champions, 30 (Mix of races and sizes) Craftsmen, (All MonstrousHumanoid and Tiny) 30 Oveerseers, (All Large Construct/Elementals) 20 Warriors, (All tiny Monstroushumanoids) 20 Sorcerers, 150 (Mix) Engineers, (tiny Humanoidmonstrous) 50 Recruiters, (tiny Humanoidmonstrous) 200 Mages, (Large Construct/elementals) 50 Guards, (Large Construct/elementals) 50 Soldiers

Ever-expanding labyrinth full of traps and illusions and generally a bad time to be in. the boss is a pushover if you can pin them down but good luck getting to them because this place is fucking huge and you'll be constantly getting turned around until you go insane from the voices in your head.

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>>51121974

Thanks SDA! Very fun cyoa! Lots of good characters and scary but unique setting!

Alalda Flamemourn
>Stroc
>Prophet
>Clarity, Charisma, Vitality

>Battlemage
>Knight Sword 4
>Polearm 10
>Magitech Musket 16
>Kite Shield 20

>Divine Unlock 1
>Weapon of Light (Magitech Musket) 2
>Weapon of Light (Polearm) 3
>Courageous Light (Battlemage) 4
>Fortitude (Battlemage) 5
>Light Ray 6
>Light Ward 7
>Mending Sparks 8
After Search and Rescue
>Consecrate
>Divine Halo
>Light Chains
After Skirmish
>Fire Unlock
>Flame Weapon (Knight Sword)
>Dragoon Armor (Battlemage)
>Explosive Blows (Polearm)
After Fort Defense
>Judgement
>Guardian
>Heaven's Fury
>Cloud of Smoke
>Conflagration
After Defiant
>Ascension
>Purge
>Apostles
>Demigod
>Magma Torrent
>Nova

>Princess Kayla's Brigade
>Phisora Jaeneth 1
>Ada Godefray 2
>Mirielda Bardol 3
>Josephine Balton 4
>Juliana Angaret 5
After Search and Rescue
>Mai Vaughen
>Raptor Mount
After Skirmish
>Sonya Keilana
>Judith Lafleche
>Tyrant Mount
After Fort Defense
>Phisney Carnhel
>Serf Bardol
>Drake Mount
After Defiant
>Dragon Mount

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>>51124211
>>51124280
>Quests
Novice: Patrol Ziona
I am a being of Stone, Iron and Root. I was created for one purpose: win the fight against the Detritus, but I am not without my own machinations. I'm not as smart as those bigwig casters from the Prism guild or the Elementalists, but I was built to fight, and can recognize the long fight ahead, longer than my time would normally permit. Because of this, during my foray into the Ziona canyons, I met like minds and purposed to them an idea: the invention of warriors that will outlast the Detritus. Together we began experimenting with the flow of our spiritual and arcane forces, testing them for loopholes. I focused on the physical and the arts of healing, Irial explored the spiritual, and Lili engineering on the arcane side.
Through our joint efforts in keeping eachother and our fellow mages alive in Ziona, we each developed our skills ever so slightly, and from then on our plan was put into motion.
I learned:
Arcane: Void Tap
Divine: Unlock, Mending Sparks
My allies both progressed to rank B physical skill for their field experience.
Together we gained Raptor Mounts.

Intermediate: Scout
We decided that we needed to test our developments, so we took the chance to take back footholds and verify theories. The fiends were tough, but with Lili masking us and Irial turning them into us, we made it through, and found many suitable places to begin testing. Along our scouting travels, we had learned that we were scouted ourselves, not by the forces of the Detritus, but by a fellow Construct. It appears we had been watched during our experimenting during our Patrols, and our new friend had taken interest. During this quest, I upgraded my body to be more durable overall and more closely bound to vital forces.
I learned:
Nature: Root, Gaia's Chosen
Divine: Fortitude, Light Ward
My allies both progressed to magic rank A, and a new ally (Tzuriel Gryn) joined our ranks.
We all upgraded to Tyrants.
>Cont

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>>51124577

Alalda, who's family had perished, was rescued by a Beautarian fighter as the city fell. She was just a small orphan girl and nobody knew who her family was, so she was named Firemourn after the loss of the city and so many in it. She was taught to ride, shoot and fight by Princess Kayla's bodyguards. Once it was discovered that Alalda had strong magical potential, she was set on the path of becoming a battlemage. Her supreme beauty has led many suitors her way, but her devotion to the purging of all detritus has caused her to reject all approaches.

Alalda specializes in healing magic and protection magic, but her hatred for detritus has given her the power to unleash powerful holy flames upon the twisted, perverse creatures. From atop her flying mount she scans for where her healing and wards are needed and swoops down to provide aid. In the meantime, she casts light spells and snipes at detritus with her musket from the air. When the fighting gets tough, she's also able to smite enemies up close and cut through the monsters with her blades.

>>51122054

Nice unusual way to use shadow magic! Very effective I'm sure!

>>51122756

Staff with wands on ends is neat idea! Like how you have a story for the quests to.

>>51122774

We have same motive to fight detritus. They killed Alalda's family to. Maybe we could help each other out sometime, but maybe not fighting since I'm opposite of stealthy...

>>51122791

Fist fighting detritus! That's pretty hard core anon!

>>51122906

Nice support build, but might want companions though.

>>51123084

Nothing wrong with growing your own legend while fighting evil!

>>51123468

I think you and I could get along really well!

>>51123644

I like your mount based idea. Very knightly!

>>51124078

I like the rise from simple person to super strong paladin.

>>51124211

Ones with detailed writeups are the best!

>>51124251

Not everybody has to be awesome front line fighter! Support and debuffs are good to!

>>51124741
...why do I get the feeling this is some salty faggot who got sick of battlemage eating a thread and a half?

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>>51123677

I posted slightly updated build >>51124577

>>51124765

But I posted a build and only said nice things about other ones.....

>>51124765
It isn't, it's Angel desperate for attention. Ignore her. She does this shit where she posts her build and in the sames post gives meaningless responses like
>I like your mount based idea. Very knightly!
so you see her build.

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>>51124578
>Cont
Expert: Reclamation
We were no longer part of the small-time, and our experiments could yield so much information when prepared and monitored in the field. We were past due for an upgrade, we needed a lab. When given word that there was a Detritus-occupied castle that was slated to be reclaimed, we knew this would be a golden opportunity. Over our many journeys, Tzuriel had taken great interest in my developing of divine powers, and during each fight would goad me into exploring them more, instructing me little by little as we advanced towards the castle. I must admit, my personal skill meant nothing in the final fight, for it was Tzuriel who fought and slew the Det-Kot. Tzuriel's motives and true power remain a mystery, even to me now.
I learned:
Arcane: Void Stare, Void Call
Divine: Divine Halo, Guardian, Light Ray
My original allies progressed to rank A physical, and were joined by Tzuriel in doing so. During our fighting, another Constuct by the name of Dharrad Uran had become close friends with us (at two letter grades higher in physical skill than base), on the grounds that he thought our plan was the funniest thing he had ever heard, and wanted to see if we could pull it off. (Check it, 4 allies at all-As)
We all upgraded to Drakes.

Heroic: Defiant
This was it, the last fight we fought as mortals. Our research had been paying off, Irial and Dharrad had agreed on a unified "tune", as Dharrad called it, between spiritual and natural magics that would meld our bodies upon death, regardless of cause, to the earth beneath them and bind our immortal souls to these spots while they were sustained from energies of the void. The latter concept was something Tzuriel had been steering us towards, but he refused to elaborate upon where he received the idea, or why he seemed so familiar with it. Chief Engineer Liliana made the final augments to our bodies to incorporate the arcane systems and loops that would initiate these, and we were ready...
>Cont

>>51124898

All I did was post positive things about the cool builds being posted! How is that wrong? It's not some conspiracy!

>>51124935
>post positive things
Meaningless drivel meant to get people to see your build, is not "positive things".

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>>51125024
3/10 got me to reply.

>>51125041
>That image
Thanks, now I have to listen to that song again.

>>51125014

I was just trying to be nice! I teally like those builds! And they weren't even posted with my build!!!

>>51125024

I struggle pretty much everyday with some emotional mental health problems that I'd rather not get into and appreciate some escapism that isn't to competitive or demanding.

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>>51124920
>Cont
The battle was bloody and long. Det-Tevr and his champions shredded their way through our many forces. Blades and blasts alike did little to deter him, and the Vilph champions were unrelenting, but still we fought on. We had built ourselves of this earth, we would not give it to the Detritus, it was ours. Scores of troops went down to Tevr's first volley of divine beams, the first of my team, Liliana, among them. As she fell, her engines kicked in and instead of slumping to the ground a corpse, she left no body but a rune of purple luminous grass. When we who remained saw that rune, we knew the war of attrition was ours, even if we all fell here, we could one day rise again. Dharrad, Tzuriel Irial and myself fought with a ferocity unmatched even by the Detritus Titans that day, one by one each of us falling to Tevr's beams, leaving our marks in the ground till there were three runes on the battlefield and myself standing atop it, across the field of bodies and broken monsters from Tevr himself. I, along with the remaining mages, charged. He fired three beams at us, but many of us dodged and advanced. He readied his next volley and we all readied our weapons. On his firing, we fired our own, and as I watched his beam tear through my body, I saw my titan swordstaff embed itself in his skull.
Ciraezir was ours.
My cohorts and I are but runes of grass on the land now. Though the blood of the battle revived us a day later, we did eventually meet our bodies' upward time limit, and so we once more died and returned to our world, laying our runes at its furthest strongholds. We exist now embraced by the earth, its eternal guardians, waiting for the day blood is shed in the safe places we are entombed, when we are needed again to fight the good fight. Forever, until it is won, and beyond.
In death I learned:
Divine: Consecrate, Light Chains, Heaven's Fury, Ascension, Demigod
Nature: Gaia's Wrath, Gaia's Spirit

>>51125109
woops, still had one mana glass bead left from the last one here.
I also learned: Nature: Vine Control

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>>51121974
>>51121987
>>51121994
>>51122013
>>51122023
>>51122037
Alright, let's do this.

Name: Toaphu
Nickname: Toa
Race: Construct

Mark:
>Sentinel
Attributes
>Strength
>Charisma
>Agility

Armor:
>Knight
Weapon:
>Hand axe/great hammer hybrid (9)
>Shield catalyst (5)
>(Unlisted) Blunt Feet attachments (0)

Force Spells: (25)
>All of them (9)
Time Spells: (7)
>Double Time (6)
>Petrify (5)
>Haste (4)
>Post-haste (3)
>Stasis (2)
>Stop (1)
>Acceleration Charm (0)

Guild:
>Knights of Dust
Companions:
>Richart (Magic to A) (21)
>Moon Jade (Magic to A) (19)
>Mouse (16)
>Tzuriel Gyrn (Physical to A) (10)
>Dharrad Uran (6)
>Zalixar Nhyr (4)
>Aarvold (0)

Quests:
>City Guard (Raptor Mount)
>Excellence (Nightweb Mount)
>Fort Defense (Cave Worm Mount)
>Sanity (Dragon Mount)

Toaphu likes to maintain a positive attitude, and cracks jokes even at the worst of times. He's extremely loyal to his team, considering them to be the only family he's got.

>>51125152
just because phantoka pohatu's mask looks like the mask of time doesn't mean it is you silly willy

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Posting one of the other good CYOAs recently put out.

Update to the Mad Science Waifu CYOA later this week, also probably something else I'm working on shortly after that.

>>51125172
I only had the time stuff for speed effects mostly. He's got the Kakama, remember?

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>>51125081
Shhh angel shh.

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>>51121974
Updated, didn't see the mana glass rewards increased.

Name: Vanta Phelgein "Bombard"

Race: Human

Mark: Slayer

Attributes:
P: Strength
S: Endurance
T: Precision
T: Vitality
T: Agility

Primal Etch: Knight
Ceasless Etch 1
Glacial Armor Etch 2
Dragoon Armor Etch 3

Weapons: Hybrid- Saber x2 + Staves (Fire and Force respectively) x 2 (20)
1: Explosive Blows + Obsidian Ice
2: Explosive Blows + Density

Spells (Starter): (8)
Fire Unlock (7)
Dragoon Armour (6)
Explosive Blows Etch (5)
Flame Skates (4)
Cauterize (3)
Dragon Fire (2)
Nova (1)
Dragoon (0)
-----------------
Spells (Novice): (2)
Ice Unlock (1)
Frozen Heart (0)
-------------------
Spells (Intermediate): (3)
Glacial Armor Etch(2)
Undead Unlock (1)
Ceaseless Armor Etch (0)
------------------
Spells (Expert): (4)
Masochism (3)
Life Drain (2)
Sanguine Essence (1)
Obsidian Ice Etch (0)
---------------------
Spells (Heroic): (5+2)
Force Unlock (6)
Density Weapon Etch (5)
Momentum (4)
Unstoppable Force (3)
Launch (2)
Mass (1)
Pound (0)

Guild: Elysium Knights

Companions (Starter): Eve Laveux PHYS+ (0)
Companions (Novice): None (3)
Companions (Intermediate): Briana Dhulcain (1)
Companions (Expert): Felira Lilikhin (6) Magi+ (5)
Azriel Malakhov (0)


Quests:
Novice- Patrol Ziona
Intermediate- Skirmish
Expert- Reclamation
Heroic- Defiant

Rewards/Mounts: Raptor> Tyrant> Drake> Mana Glass

Vanta is a master of close range combat He has picked up spells from many schools of magic for the sole purpose of amplifying his prowess in battle. His spells focus on giving him an edge in melee, increasing the power of his strikes, bolstering his defenses and allowing him to thrive in prolonged skirmishes. Although his purely offensive spells are lacking, his swords carry an explosive force behind them and his blows can shatter stone and crush steel effortlessly. Vanta lives for the thrill of battle, only in the heat of combat can this explosive warrior truly flourish.

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>>51125191
Page 2 almost 20 minutes later because I'm retarded and forgot I was posting it.

>>51125287
Wait I'm dumb. Forgot to save
Bonus Post-Update Skills (4):
Wind Unlock (3)
Zephyr (2)
Time Unlock (1)
Haste (0)

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>>51125241

>>51121974
>when it comes to magic, the khif strive.

Uh, I think you mean thrive buddy. Please be ESL.

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>>51121974
>>51121987
>>51121994
>>51122013
>>51122023
>>51122037
Name: Cody Mann
"Insta-gib"
Human

Mark: Slayer
- Primary: Strength
- Secondary: Endurance
- Tertiary: Vitality, Agility, Precision

Armour: Knight
- Energy Harvest

2x Dagger - 4
2x Shortsword - 6
1x Polearm (Voulge) - 6
- Flame Weapon
- Density
- Plasma Weapon
Square Shield - 4

- Force unlock
- Momentum
- Unstoppable Force
- Launch
- Etch: Density
- Mass
- Pound
- Flame unlock
- Cloud of Smoke
- Conflagration
- Magma Torrent
- Flame Skates
- Cauterize
- Dragon Fire
- Etch: Flame Weapon
- Nova
- Vulcan
- Dragoon
- Lightning unlock
- Bolt
- Warp
- Smite
- Etch: Plasma Weapon
- Etch: Energy Harvest
- Mjolnir
- Conduit

- Felira Lilikin
- Azriel Malakhov
- Eve Laveux
- Akra Kaithla
- Jourdain Ricaud

Guild: Knights of Dust

Quests
- Novice Quest: Patrol Ziona
- Intermediate Quest: Skirmish
- Expert Quest: Reclemation
- Heroic Quest: Defiant
Rewards: Obvious coins, Dragon Mount

>>51121974
>>51125668

Cody joined up with the army due to his village being destroyed by a titan in his youth, and so got the slayer mark in order to hunt the toughest creatures out there. The only item of his home he possesses is a Koulge from his homestead, and is extremely protective of it, not just because of its personal value, but also because its importance to his strategy.

Cody completely relies on the Knights of Dusts tactics, dropping onto the enemy, activating all of his tier 4 abilities and annihilating his target while absorbing enough energy through his armour and mjolnir to escape back to his allies. More of a one-trick-pony in combat, but extremely destructive in the opening stages of a battle.

Keeps a kill count, which he seeks to expand, hunting the toughest enemy on the field before employing his chief tactic. On the battlefield he doesn't pay much attention to his allies, as he relies on them to handle themselves, and protect him while he recharges. Off the battle field though is always offering a helping hand when asked, though is constantly focussed on preparing for the next battle, fixing his teams equipment, planning ambush positions and dreaming of future glories.

He is defined by his combat prowess, and worries what he'll have left after the war is over.

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>>51125668
>>51125759
Fuck forgot a paragraph

Has a record of putting himself and others in danger, due to his obsession with killing the toughest opponent, even if it is beyond his capabilities. This has lead to him flat out rejecting orders if he thinks he can claim a bigger kill.

Pic related is how I imagine him in battle, at least for a few moments.

The size of the guts justifies the means

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It's not like I wanted to finish it or anything, I just happened to finally finish it. Here is Order.
PDF Vers. is right there.
Img. Vers.: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/0B8wEYNxDPxzdUEl0YkdOcmpBR0U?usp=sharing

Note: The reason why it took Order so long was because the whole thing surpassed my original scope of a Final Fantasy-like CYOA, and so (lots of) things had to be removed.
Note: Order will end up receiving expansions based on each of the Calamity Wars.
Remember to have fun and if you have any questions just ask.

Top stuff to look forward to:

-Pokemon Personified Plus+ (Original CYOA + Sun & Moon Expansion) (PDF Vers.)
-Armored Core: Lost War (Remake)
-Unnamed Dark Fantasy CYOA (New CYOA)
-Tribe Wars (New CYOA)

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>tfw you realize you're writing a VN and have no idea how to turn it into a CYOA
Dang... and I really enjoyed how I got the visuals to look.

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>>51125866
I know that feel.

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>>51123239
>>51123530
>>51124090

MH update when?

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>>51121974
Oorain "Sharp-Eyes" Venderhavn
(Hunter Khif of the Faint Runners )
Primary Attribute:
>Precision
Secondary Attribute:
>Intellect
Tertiary Attributes:
>Mind
>Endurence
>Agility

Armour:
>Rogue
Etches:
>Blink
>Energy Harvest
>Echolocation

Weapons:
Sorcerer's Light Crossbow (Crossbow+Wand)
Etches:
>Plasma Weapon
>Wind Weapon
>Void Discharge
The Dome (Targe+Shield Catalyst)
>Etches:
>Plasma Weapon
>Wind Weapon
>Void Discharge
Shortsword
Etches:
>Plasma Weapon
>Wind Weapon
>Void Discharge

>>Spells&Etches (8)
Starting out:
>Wind Unlock
>Zephyr
>Fling
>Mist
>Lightning Unlock
>Plasma Weapons
>Blink
>Energy Harvest
Post-Novice (+3):
>Arcane Unlock
>Void Discharge
>Wind Weapon
Post-Intermediate (+4):
>Vortex
>Eye of the Storm
>Shock Pulse
>Energy Siphon
Post-Expert (+5):
>Energy Focus
>Energy Barrier
>Mjölnir
>Static
>Shock Force
Post-Heroic (+6(+2 maybe?)):
>Fury Charge
>Air Burst
>Wind Slash
>Thunder
>Storm Ruler
>Mana Burn

Quests:
>Search and Rescue (Raptor mount)
>Scout (Tyrant mount)
>Hunted (Drake Mount)
>Defiant (Dragon mount)


Companions
Starting out (5):
>Jourdain Ricaud
>Abaigeal Ní Síthigh
>Karina Róslaug
Post-Novice (8):
>Serf Bardol (Boost Physical)
>Mirielda Bardol (Boost Magical)
Post-Intermediate (14):
>Dameon Caras
>Felira Lilikhin
>Azriel Malakhov
Post-Expert (24):
>Felira Lilikhin (Boost Physical)
>Azriel Malakhov (Boost Physical)
>Elyon (Boost Magical)
>Osgood Polham

Hailing from a small village near the Venn Mountains, the Detritus encroachment has long been on the mind of Oorain. To help ensure the safety of his home he took to joining the battlemages, specifically the faint forerunners, in the hope of assisting in pushing the border back.

In combat, Oorain has taken to make use of a small variety of different schools of magic to ensnare, sap and pick off individual targets from from a relatively safe distance while at the same time boosting his allies' offensive capabilities with the magic sapped from his enemies.

>>51122037
Well one could always expand the setting.
Some details can be gleamed with the companions and the guilds (beautarian and their rifles) but more would be rnjoyable.

>>51122291
I don't understand

>>51126833
what don't you understand

>>51122447
Looks good. I wouldn't mind a 1pt or 2 bump in the font but it is read-able with my bad eyes. I do suggest that for your bullet points you indent then by a space or two from the main body text.

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Shamefully reposting for opinions.

I'm working on a "You are a lovecraftian entity now" cyoa and this is one of its pages. I want opinions on the names and epithets, otherwise any advise on the visual design and such is greatly appreciated.

As before, feel free to treat as a stand alone since I haven't actually worked on any of the other pages yet.

>>51125866
Just make sure that there are fun choices. As long as there's fun choices, people will read whatever text wall there are, as long as they're distributed evenly throughout. Royal Revival was kinda like that - having sizable text blocks at the top of each page that didn't really contribute to much.

>>51121858
yes.

>>51127049
>Ninirhsela
>Wants to form a global theocracy with you as its head as god
10/10 waifu, didn't read any of the Intermediate/Lesser waifus.

The circles are nice, especially the gradient you used on the first one. I also think it's good you arranged the options in a "wave" form rather than straight, given the circles.
But I don't like the title being written like the Dark Souls title

>>51127049
I mean, I'm about fifty fifty on the names here. Cthulhu, for instance, isn't supposed to be pronounced as it is today. It's got this phlegm noise in the middle according to Lovecraft, and it's supposed to be unpronounceable in the human tongue. While that's neat and all, long letter jumbles are things that people will never ever remember or pronounce correctly. I do like how they all have titles under the word salad names, though. Very "king in yellow," both atmospheric and easier to throw on a list. Good on you for that.

>>51127049
You get way too many. That's all I have to say so far... gonna need to read further.

>>51127121
>fun choices
They aren't. There are two choices, both pick-one tier, on page 1, the first only being relevant later. The relevance of option 1 is also completely removed since it only matters if you pick a certain option on page 2, and you will just go back and choose differently for your preferred outcome. The option only matters if it was a VN since you can't easily go back in time and change the choice.

>>51127246
how can there be to many choices in a cyoa?

>>51127269
>VN
>can't easily go back in time
You literally just have to scroll. Or start a new playthrough and skip previous seen scenes. Think of your second page like a mystery box. Not the most replayable, but it has a surprise just the same. However, you shouldn't make any choice completely superior to any others. If you've done that, you'll need to change it or else you'll just get some unhappy customers.

>>51127156
Well cthulhu is certainly the titular entity and probably the most culturally signicant, but I'd argue that he's the exception when you really get to looking at the list of names you get things like azathoth and nyarlathotep which have a clear cut way of being pronounced.

But that's not really important since what I did for the names was splice the names of all major deities in about ten different deific pantheons and then assign different areas of influence to the morphemes, as an example the three letters BOD refer to darkness and abyss as an area of influence. The point being that the very same system used for the servants is what I want to use for the players and the same goes for building your own epithet.

So basically I'm asking how nice they sound and if you could imagine yourself using a similar system to make a name

>>51127295
I get what he means, rather there is too much clutter and I guess the descriptions are too long. I wanted to make it so that each tier would have twice as many as the last leading to 6/12/24 but due to space issues ordered them as 6/14/21 to make the best use the page.

>>51122233
>>51122291
>>51126865
Sorry I just now understood that you won't have enough etching spells.
Let's do it though.
For a sword it would be 10 etches, (for a pole monstrum it would be 20)
Our target is therefore getting those 10 etches on a (pretty much useless) piece of metal then retiring because we will die in battle:
THE ULTIMATE ENTCHANTER:
Either Human so we can still be useful as a warrior, or my preference a construct made of Anomium for near endless endurance and affinity for etches.
To be both capable for battle and enchanting, going Sentinel with precision, strength and Agility. (Magic we don't need to know)
Soldier armor Etch.
The weapon would follow last. (But it is pretty much non-combat)
So either Elementalist or Prism as guild.
>Spells:
Starting with Frost Unlock, Obsidian Ice and Ember Drinker to make your weapon wieldable.
Nature unlock with leafmetal and neurotoxins.
Finish it off with Arcane Unlock and Void Discharge to deal with mages.
Luciene Godfrey and Gilberd Charlys even though they are not caster we recruit them because of their blacksmith affinity.

Quest
>City Guard should be possible even for us.
Star Burst (Etch)
Flame Unlock T0
Explosive Blows (Etch)
>Excellence as we can do the physical event easily
Flame Weapon (Etch)
Shadow Unlock T0
Shadow Weapon (Etch) (Need to figure out how to make it visible)
Vorpal (Etch)

Now retire or go for any other unlock and it's weapon etch except Time.
We have created a masterpiece with 9 etches.
If one goes for heroic (and survives) and takes the 2 mana crystals a total of 17 etches of all magic schools (except slam school) can be put into a single weapon. It would be an invisible ice/stone coated burning weapon though.

Now the weapon itself.

>>51127049
>Oazoenk
>has the ability to shift its physical form to resemble anyone or thing in existence
So it can only copy, instead of just being able to take on (just about) any form?

>>51127493
Personally, I'd say that depends on how liberally you interpret "anyone" and "resemble." If you had the power to transform into anyone "resembling" yourself, that means you could make minor changes to your form. However, now that you've changed, the realm of what resembles you is now different, meaning you can go even further from your original form, as long as you resemble your new form. Rinse & repeat & you can become anything.

>>51127409
Now I don't understand. How are you supposed to be getting so many etching slots on a sword?

>>51127409
Now for the 9 etch weapon and the intermediate retiring route.
The blade is 1 x Ioscaylium, mixed with 1 x Ashkalt and 1 x Starbrine with 2 x Anomium.
The handle would be 2 x starbrine, 2 x Ashkalt and 1 x Anomium.
Going for a Two-Handed with comfy Grip, Full-Tang, knuckle bow and wider Crossguard (8 stones)
For the blade a long broad blade with all 4 upgrades are enough (8 stones).
For the rest we get a shield Catalyst combined in as we won't use much energy in battle.

So we have a
5 Blood
5 Willpower
15 Bone
57 Mind (!)
30 Density (Around the same as a comparable Iron Sword)
Not bad, if a bit low blood and willpower. (Etches should change it)
A magnificent weapon, with runes running down the blade with even more runes appearing on the crossguard and knuckle bow, permanently coated in ice and engulfed in magical flames.


For the poleweapon and heroic 17 etches.
Long Staff 4
Guisarme 1 + 4 upgrades
Small Axe Head 1 + 4 upgrades
Spetum 2 + 4 at the end

Each weapon head is formed by 1 x Ioscaylium, mixed with 2 x Etching Metal with 2 x Anomium.
The Weapon handle is 1 x Anomium and 4 x Etching metal

15 Blood total (5 per Weapon head)
15 Willpower (5 per Weapon head)
29 Bone
107 Mind (!)
60 Density (Equal compared to a poleaxe made of iron)
The greatest weapon.
From the looks sadly it is invisible but would be coated in stone/ice also flames? (Kinda fucked up really)

>>51127605
>>51127682
This way, making everything from Ashkalt, Starbrine, Moranyx with a hint of Anomium.
More Anomium would have been possible but I wanted to go with a average density

>>51125081
Daily reminder not to bully our poor little Angel.

>>51127718
I didn't know telling her to get off 4chan and actually deal with her problems was considered bullying her.

>>51125831
>PDF is 325 pages
>Traveller's Tale is literally 164 pages

Granted the font is bigger and there's spaces everywhere, but I swear I told you not to do this my man. I think I will stick with the image version, but I am glad you're alive. I figured you would be.

>>51127328
Sorry, you're going to have to clarify that naming system again. You took deities of the same domain from different pantheons, took the core word in the center of those names, then mashed them together to have a universal meaning to assign to all the beings?

In essence, you're saying that everyone is basically named "[domain][rank][specification]?" If that's the case, it seems they have more a list of titles than individual callings. Not sure if I really appreciate "unknowable abyssal beings" introducing themselves as "accountant minor from shipping."

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>>51121974

Nayara Tajen 'Sudden Death'

Human Forerunner
-Primary: Endurance
-Secondary: Clarity
-Tertiary: Precision, Agility, Vitality

>Armour

Rogue Armour
-spiritual gaze
-echolocation
-ceaseless
-fortitude

>Weapons

Bow
-neurotoxins
-vorpal
-soul ripper
-shadow weapon

Sabre
-neurotoxin
-vorpal
-shadow weapon

6xDagger
-neurotoxin
-vorpal
-soul ripper

>Magic

Nature
-Neurotoxins
-Spiritual Gaze
-Mend

Shadow
-Vorpal
-Shadow Jump
-Shadow Weapon

Undead
-Masochism
-Life Drain
-Ceaseless
-Soul Ripper

Divine
-Mending Sparks
-Fortitude

Force
-Seismic Sense

Wind
-Zephyr
-Fling
-Mist
-Echolocation
-Air Burst

Frost
-Frozen Heart

Challenges
-Hindrance
-Scout
-Hunted
-Annihilate (extra etches for armour and bow)


With a natural wanderlust and desire for adventure, becoming a battlemage was a natural choice for Nayara. The life of a forerunner suits her perfectly, each day bringing new dangers and challenges, and she excels at it, having an indomitable will to survive, if only to see the new sites of tomorrow.

Although physically blessed, Nayara has no real talent for magic and struggles to cast complicated spells, leading her to dabble in lower level magic from a large number of branches. She is somewhat talented at etches though, and the bow, sword and daggers which she is so capable with have been enhanced to mean near certain death to anything they touch.

Although technically a member of the Faint Runners, and theoretically working towards specific goals, Nayara seems to get sidetracked often and is an outlier of the guild at best. She has made many temporary friends of convenience on her travels, but the only true friends she keeps in (semi)frequent contact with are the famous duo Felira Lilikhin and Azriel Malakhov, along with whom she slew a titan.

>>51127793
People have been telling her that for years, so what's the point of continuing to badger her? And she's said before that she's been diagnosed with some mental illnesses. Doesn't her being diagnosed imply she's seen a doctor of some kind about it?

>>51125831
Apparently this got buried under Batlemage a bit. Glad you're alive Italics. Are all of your works gonna be reaching 40-50 pages now? Looking forward to going over it, nonetheless.

>>51127913
You've never heard of people "self-diagnosing" with shit?

>>51127902
Do you think neurotoxin plus the Shadow/Vorpal combo is overkill? I thought about the same combo, as I'm a Nature/Shadow spec with a love of poison, but I feel that much instakill becomes redundant

>>51125831
>It's bigger then my baby
HOA can wait. Mother Fucker.

>>51125831
You're a madman. There's about 200 pages of companions in this.

>>51125831
Oh. I'll be busy in here for a bit. Will post a build... eventually.

>>51125831
Why the fuck did you use a such a large font, this whole thing is filled with so much empty space.

>>51127828
>this is 53399 words
>traveller's tale is 135064 words and literally 210 pages
It isn't really anywhere near Traveller.

>>51128041
>italics
>remotely any ability to format things

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>>51127968

I can think of plenty of cases where one or the other might be ineffective, especially in the case of large creatures where a combination of hitting vital points with particularly damaging attacks repeatedly might be the minimum needed to kill them.

Agiainst a lot of opponents though, you're entirely correct, massive overkill with three abilities that are all designed to be 'instant death' sort of skills.

To that, I refer you to pic related.

>>51127967
I certainly hope that's not the case with her since I'm convinced she has very real and serious psych issues that should be treated by a professional.

>>51128057
His ineptitude in formatting is borderline cartoony.

>>51125831
>>51128041
An even better question would be: Why the fuck did you use such massive line-spacing?

>>51127968
>>51128071
That's not overkill, overkill is double time, shadow weapon, vorpal, explosive blow backed by vortex storm ruler and mjolnir fury charge.

Literally guaranteed to one shit everything.

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>>51122357
Karien "Gatecrasher" Vesigoth

>Race
Khif

>Mark
Hunter

>Tertiary Attributes
Agility, Mind and Clarity

>Armour
Battlemage

>Weapons
Wand+Custom(Magitech Pistol;short range, high fire rate, I wish weapon forge supported guns but I'll just imagine it's based off the reapeting crossbow stock) x2

>Spells/Etches
Lightning Unlock
Plamsa Weapon
Blink
Bolt
Warp
Smite
Mjolnir
Conduit

Wielding a pair of magitech pistols she brings a hail of lightning bolts to the battle field. As her fighting style tends to burn through her mana enormously fast she prefers to settle fights with swift brutal assaults. As a person she is snarky and sassy.

>>51128109

Lets not get silly now.

>>51128175
Its not that silly if you think about it, you spend all your mana casting a fury charge mjolnir, get struck by lightning, use that unlimited energy and cast a storm ruler vortex, wait until both subsides and shoot someone that really really needs to die very very far away.

Blow that motherfucker up and everyone around him in a 3 mile radius.

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>>51128071
>That pic
How did you get your hands on top secret US military doctrine?

>>51122037
Race: Human
Mark: Vanguard

Mark attributes: vitality, endurance, and precision

Armour: Knight
Armour Etches:Poise, fortitude, blink

Weapon(s): hybrid Shield catalyst and kite shield (12) , Hybrid knight sword and magitech musket (2)
Weapon Etches: Explosive blows, weapons of light,

Spells
Force unlock: inertia, momentum, seismic sense, unstoppable force, deflect, launch, immovable object, mass, pound and tilt
Flame unlock:fireball, cloud of smoke, flame skates, cauterize , dragon fire , fire disk, ray of fire, nova , firestorm and dragoon
Lightning unlock: energy siphon, energy focus, energy barrier, bolt , warp, smite, mjolnir
Divine unlock: light ray, light ward, mending sparks, consecrate, divine halo, light chains, heaven’s fury, judgement, ascension, demi-god, purge

Guild: Knights of Alnor

Companions: none

Quests
Novice: Patrol Ziona
Intermediate: Denial
Expert: Calamity
Heroic: Defiant

>>51125831
Traveler was too hot for many to touch due to its size. Now there is this. Jesus Christ, Italics.

>>51128127
Would waifu/10

>>51125191
does a fae huntress, as an uplifted fairy, have the powers of a fairy?

>>51128325
See >>51128048

Traveler is more than twice as large and only takes up a two thirds of the size.

>>51127913
>>51128077
I don't think she's gotten any help. But we agree. With the shit she posts, she needs actual help. Part of that being getting off 4chan.

>>51128346
You just love pistols and gunslingers don't you

>>51125831
>gender bonuses

I'm only a page in and I already know this is going to be fun shit once Battlemage does down and everyone takes the time to go through this

>>51125831
>>51128475
>Female - Smaller, weaker, individuals compared to males. They really more on brains than brawns.
>really
C'mon Italics, get your shit together.

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>>51128475
>everyone takes the time to go through this

>>51125191
Marble
tentacles with animal blood: mostly for the storage.
Omnisce with animal blood: for obvious reasons.
Thralled Fae Huntress with my blood: bodyguard with good synergy with Omnisce.
Void painter with my blood: utility, and manual labour with the dolls.
Alraune with my blood: I ought to be able to make money by growing something valuable. Saphron, maybe.

>Stay with me
I didn't pick a sex slave summon, so here we go.

>>51128465
And horn girls.

I'm not making an in-depth Weapon Forge musket creator add-on for nothing. Gonna need a lot of art for it.

>>51125831
Just glimpsed through and Christ the stupid bullshit you can pull with customizable classes and master command skills is just ridiculous.

>>51128704
The Gun forge I was looking forward too.
The choice of art is a part of why I enjoy it.

Also any chance for armor creator?

>>51128704
>>51128911

On this sort of a note, what made you decide to simplify the armour so much? If I remember right, there were sets of armour with different pieces that you could pick and choose in earlier incarnations.

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>>51125831
>325 pages

>>51128475
>>51125831
Makes me annoyed that I can't make a female build without being worthless and weak desu. It's like old /tg/ memes up in here.

>>51125831
>325 pages
>1.73mb
So this one doesn't have any images I'm guessing? Lame. There's no value to text CYOAs.

are those 100+ pages pdf cyoas like normal cyoas where you pick gear, powers and companions just extremely long?

>>51129314
> I have the attention span of a twelve year old

>>51129345
>I'm from jumpchain and don't realize visual design is half the point with CYOAs.

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>>51129314
There's a link to the image version in that post, Anon.

>>51127328
Design doesn't feel cluttered to me.

>>51129362
You are literally fucking retarded. There is a fucking link to the image version in the third damned line of the post.
>Img. Vers.: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/0B8wEYNxDPxzdUEl0YkdOcmpBR0U?usp=sharing

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>>51129314

>>51127867
Well Shub-Niggurath is introduced as the Black Goat of the Woods with a Thousand Young. Lovecraftian entities generally have long titles like this, often multiple.

>>51129324
Universal War and Traveller are. They both are actually fleshed out settings with interesting powers, cool quests, and some of the best companions I've seen.

>>51128911
>>51129013
Armour Creator is a twinkle in my eye; I have no plans for it but have considered it.

I simplified the armour selection because you don't select your armour anymore, you select your armour type. Didn't think the mixing-and-matching worked very well because it made people pick things like a plate armour chest and wizard boots.

So instead, I translated the magic effects from the armour pieces into armour Etches.

>>51129447
RIP Loldobeth or whatever the Universal War guy's name was.

Wish we'd see EDG again too.

>>51129487
>So instead, I translated the magic effects from the armour pieces into armour Etches.
Didn't you weaken it considerably, considering now you have to invest in magic schools to get armor etches? So whereas before you got 4 enchantments for free in addition to your spells, now you need to spend at least 3 points each to get an armor etch? That's 12, more than half your points, just to get your armor to how it used to be.

>>51128475
I went through most of it except the companions. Its literally Final Fantasy Tactics: the cyoa. Italics obviously put alot of effort into it, but honestly why would I want to play his cyoa when I can play the actual games again and I do? Especially when its a huge laundry list of abilities, classes, commands, summons, equipment and items.

>>51129447
>some of the best companions I've seen.
It can't be that hard to write a few good ones when you write 100+

>>51129540
Half of the previous armour effects were redundant and now you can have different combination, such as Poise, Blink and Direction all in one.

>>51127049
Inconsistent capitalization bothers me in the titles of the girls (eg. "The watcher over the Cosmos" should be "The Watcher Over the Cosmos). In the description of Oanuracata, Himalayas should be capitalized also.

The idea is pretty sick and I'm looking forward to this.

>>51129649
>Half of the previous armour effects were redundant
Not really, I thought letting me lift heavier weapons and being able to walk on walls was pretty great. Now I can't do that, I am a Frost mage and I'm only allowed to be fat and slow with tankier armor. It actually kills ability and versatility pretty hard to be limited to one, maybe two etches based exclusively on your school unless you only shallow dipped in everything.

>>51129487
>Didn't think the mixing-and-matching worked very well because it made people pick things like a plate armour chest and wizard boots.
Sadly that was what I liked the most from the cyoa.

>>51129644
And somehow other content creators still struggle to write one engaging companion that isn't a waifu

>>51129707
Well than adjust your build instead of whining. There is more than enough mana glass to master one School and dip into two others.

>>51129707
>lift heavier weapons
You can.

>walk on walls
Still can.

You have more than enough Mana Glass coins by the end, more than ever before in this CYOA.

>>51129717
You're free to imagine that you're wearing plate armour and wizard boots, just as long as the majority of your armour fits your armour's primary etch.

>>51127295
>>51127328
Not about clutter or too many choices.
You have too many 'points' or 'picks' to make from the available options.
Nine god damn waifus?

>>51129739
Could you name any examples of the companions from UW/TT that are "some of the best companions I've seen"?

>>51129778
>>51129782
Takes 17 points to master a school (or at least Frost.) You get 26 total points as a master, at the end of the story more or less. So 9 points left. Then you spend 3 each to get those two example etches, leaving you only 3 points left. So no, you basically have to ONLY go for etches to be able to afford them after mastering your school to get them. Not even a dip into the other schools' spells, just only going for the etches. Not to mention they pigeonhole you into taking the school the etch is from. I hate Forces, but that's where the wall walking is now. You have to be Forces to get it.

>>51129798
You're suppose to be a Lovecraftian god yourself, in this one. Lots of servants is required.