Composing

>>72366335
>throwing as many different types of notes as possible in
>odd time signature THAT CHANGES
>accidentals
stop showing off anon, you know damn well no-one here knows about composition

>>72366449
Fuck really? are accidentals and odd meter really above /mu/'s head? I figured this'd be the board if any where some people could give real advice.

>>72366519
No, it's not -- give me half an hour, I'm doing laundry; will you still be around? ;)

>>72366335
Ok OP, I made a recording on my phone... now tell me how to get this shit off of my phone and onto vocaroo or something and we can discuss it.

>>72366335
Here it is:
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1ibAtDF0Vvh
Now tell me why you want to save any of this and why you want to go to C major/a minor.

Why not follow the same rhythmic pattern in measure 5? Why the odd number of measures?
What is this supposed to feel like?

>>72366335
well for starters it looks like you're trying for a 18th century esque composition, but in measure 3 you have a chain of dissonances that don't resolve in the outer voices and parallel 5ths between the bass and alto. You might want to read up on basic voice leading.
But I'll lay it out for you
>dissonances are both approached and resolved.
So the last beat of measure 2, all voices are consonant and then at the start of m. 3 you drop the bass down to a B which creates a dissonance between the B and the A. Instead of moving both down, perhaps hold the B constant and move both the A and the F# to G, or move the A to G and the F# to another note that's consonant with both G and B, like D.
>no parallel 5ths (or octaves, but if you're just trying to double a voice for emphasis it's ok)
don't do this unless you're trying to be Debussy or composing a more modern composition

There are more rules, but you can get by with just those. When putting down a progression of chords, think to yourself "where does this want to lead?" Every chord has a place and a purpose.

>>72367845
Oh damn son. I'll post this right now so you at least know I'm listening, I'll follow it up in a minute once I'm done writing

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>>72367984
>don't do this unless you're trying to be Debussy
Doesn't everyone want to be Debussy? :)

>>72368116
well I hope OP wasn't trying to be Debussy because he wasnt doing a good job

>>72367845
Well, let me first explain how I got it to where it is, and why I'm stuck:

I wrote the cantus and counterpoint to follow a 16 beat phrase. Afterward, I wanted to experiment with it, so I broke it up into two phrasings, six beats phrased in 3 to build the melodic foundation, then ten beats phrased in 2 to drive tension then resolve and set up for the next set. What I wanted to do was create a dialogue between the two key signatures, developing in C and reprisal in D, etc., however I just don't quite know how to pull that off.

>>72367984
Oh damn you're right. There's a perfect consonance moving in parallel in measure 3 it was just masked by the held note. Thanks man.

>>72368400
Do you know where to go now? Maybe start the next section starting on IV (F maj)?

The first part is kind of growing on me.
I changed the A maj chord to f# min on beat 1 and changed the B maj chord to E maj 7 on beat 2 of measure 9.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1Yz4UvUe2HM

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>>72367984
Okay, I believe measures 1-5 follow the species rules now. Ever since you pointed it out the 5th stuck out like a sore thumb. Here's my solution, it sounds much better to me now.

>>72368768
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0FNJxx6CzdJ
It's really growing on me :3
I think the G in the bass is too heavy though (so I left it out in this recording)

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>>72368722
and here's a transcription of what you just did so dorkface mc music...face can look at it

>>72366449
>odd time signature
nigaa WHAT 2/4 and 3/4 are not odd times.

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>>72369165
Almost -- here you go.
That rolled chord in the 2/4 measure was me messing up; please ignore that ;_;

>>72369343
ayy thanks for your help nerd

http://vocaroo.com/i/s0bWG4wkasKf

>>72369930
>http://vocaroo.com/i/s0bWG4wkasKf
The birds chirping is essential to this piece, why did you leave it out?

>>72369971
Idunno man as impressive as the sibelius 7 sounds library is I don't think it includes any fauna

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>>72369993
That's too bad.

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>>72366335
Does this belong here?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_WAuSlRuepA