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Do No Harm (CYOA) - #7

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>A moment of silence passes as the unicorn takes in the Doctor's orders.
>He doesn't look too confident, if you do say so yourself.
>The kind of expression of not getting what you expected, like ordering an ice cream and finding out that they only have the worst flavour left.
>"I...well that makes sense, b-but is there anything else you can do?"
>Doc Pill's face is as neutral as usual.
>>"Not unless you mind staying here. There's only so much we can do without more data, and that takes time."
>The younger stallion shakes his head.
>"No...no, I'm sure. I'll have to get back to my house, but I can come back tomorrow! How's that sound?"
>Pill shrugs.
>"Do what you must. It's getting late though, you may want to get moving."
>>"Right."

>Norm goes to leave, brushing the chair aside as he moves.
>He nearly trips out the door. Pill watches the pony introduce his snout to the wall with a reserved expression.
"Uh...maybe I should walk with him? Make sure he gets home alright?"
>>"...perhaps that's for the best. You could work on your bedside manner."
>He leans in to whisper to you.
>>"Get the feeling that his problem is something more..." He taps the base of his horn. "...mental. Keep an eye out."
>The Doctor steps past you and magics the door open in time for him to fall on his face.
>>"Right then! Why don't you come back tomorrow and we can do a more thorough checkup? My assistant here will make sure you get home safe."
>Norm is helped up and dusted off in Pill's telekinesis and the two of you are out not a moment later.

[cont.]
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>>30597225
>Anima's buildings aren't tall enough yet to completely block out the sunset, giving the street a good bit of illumination as workers come to light up the street

lamps.
>Your charge directs you through the streets as you keep pace nearby, with thankfully much less crashing this time. He's mostly silent otherwise.
>Personally you're beginning to wonder if your first thoughts were correct. Electrolyte/salt imbalance *is* the most direct cause, but...
>Doc Pill suggested it could be more...psychological.
>But Norm was adamant about not getting treatment so you will just have to oblige for now and wait for him to come back tomorrow.
>...no reason you can't try to figure it out in the meantime though. A recently Cutie Marked pony overuses their talents for spellcasting and just so happens to

get the consequence they were always told they would? A little fishy, even foul play is unlikely.

>The walk is relatively short, just a few streets away from the clinic. He stops at the end of the road.
>"Okay...I think that's all. I'll go in the rest of the way by myself, don't want to make them suspicious..."
>He smiles lightly and holds his hoof out towards a blue post box.
>"Thanks for bringing me back, I-I'll be back for a check-up tomorrow, promise!"

[cont.]
>>
>>30597228

"You're going back home like this? But...you're blind."
>Waving your arm in front of his face to say 'Hey, I'm over here', you drag him to properly face you.
>"Not just yet! I can still see things in front of me...just not really far things."
>His brow furrows to hold a mild squint.
>Closing your eyes with a sigh you shake your head.
"Still, I can't just leave your alone. Why would your family be suspicious anyway? Won't you tell them about..."
>It took but a moment, but all you see is the retreating rear of the pony growing smaller as he trots down the street.
"...right. See you tomorrow."

>You make haste back through the streets with nothing left to keep you out.
>It's getting late after all, and you'd rather not spend it outside if there's nothing to do.
>Part of you wanted to ask if he'd noticed any other issues before this supposed blind spell, but you feel like the answer would be either insubstantial...or something embarrassing he wouldn't admit to.
>Either way...

>You're almost back at the clinic now, the cobblestones and signboards taking on familiar looks.
>The sound of something hitting a hardwood floor echoes down the street, followed by crashing.
>It's hard to tell, but it almost sounds like...
>You push the clinic's front doors open with your magic and step inside.
>The front end looks...quiet. A door hangs ajar down the hall...a certain patient's room.
>But you see some signs of dropped equipment on the floor.

"Hello? Doc?"
>The door slams shut behind you, pushed with some unseen weight. It makes you jump.
>Doc Pill glares at you from the side, the rest of his head not very mobile due to being...embedded into the door.
>He snorts, tail flicking in annoyance.
>"Heart...you've got some explaining to do."
>>
Okay, so, here's the thing

It's been months since I last ran DNH and coming back now...I don't feel any more into it. I like the world I've made and the characters, but the plot has been less than interesting, to put it lightly.

I want opinions on this. I just wanted to try longer updates for about a week just to see how it'd turn out before I have to go away for a few months, and after these few days of RL getting in the way...I can safely say that nothing new has come into my head. And seeing so few immediate replies takes my motivation for a nosedive because it felt (and still kinda does) like there just isn't much interest. Not that I can really blame anyone. Story's bad, this whole in-quest day has been nothing but filler

I'm close to declaring the plot unsalvagable and making plans to restart the whole thing, rehash the plot, do it over with hopefully even less mistakes next time.I feel like there are things I should've done better,
but I'm doubting I can fix them easily with the current state of things.


Either option won't be happening anytime soon though.
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>>30597234
Uh... I was innocent?
I see our patient has awoken. Did he attacked Doc in a panic? Pull Doc's rump to get him out of the door?
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