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Futaloo get?

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>>30423066
You madman.
You're dealing with forces you don't understand!

Also, I say put this in the OP.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-v4R2ZcxPlA
Should cover most FiMFiction drama scenarios and whenever Bleedin feels like posting.

New video soon

Death is only a state of mind

>>30423558
Does that mean it doesn't matter whether I kill myself or not?

>>30422733
>seeking the perfect clopfic
Speaking of which, has anyone read any interesting clop recently?

>>30423066
Futabelle get.

I realised I haven't posted anything new in over a year since I'm now waiting to be done with stories to post them.

I guess I could post some one-shots I have lying around after a passing edit...

need something a little dark, perhaps gory as well. Needs lots of despair though.

Has it ever been explained in futuristic fanfiction how ponies use computers? Especially keyboards, when you're limited to hooves it must be difficult as fuck

I'm Interested to see how this was handled

>>30426033
magic. or typing with a pencil held in their mouths

>>30423729
It's the state of your mind being splattered all over the wall

>>30426429
>magic
Why do non-Unicorn scum even exist.

>>30423558
When will you tackle 7DSJ?

>>30426033
I don't know a fanfic that deals with that, but if I remember correctly it's already been dealt with in the show with A.K. Yearling's typewriter. It's just something in the background, but it has only two hoof sized keys so I guess logically it would be a binary input which makes sense when you have almost no manual dexterity.

The way I would do it would be to either have the writing system be a readable version of binary or the letters could be typed in like Morse code. Like an old cellphone you hammer on the keys until it reaches the letter you want. It would just have to be optimized for a two key system so the most common characters would appear first.

Or if you think that hooves aren't as hard and have some dexterity and flexibility to them there could be two circular pads for each forehoof so flexing or even rotating the hoof on the pad would correspond to different characters or functions spread around the different points of the circle kinda like the old ipod wheels.

I guess people are busy sperging out over the movie trailer so we're on page 9. Might as well bump with a question I had.

HOW THE FUCK DO YOU GET INTO WRITING?

It seems every other hobby or interest has a detailed guide for how to start, but everything I can find for writing simply says "Just start writing! :^)" or talks about how to start planning a whole goddamn novel. I'm a competent writer, but I've never written creatively and it's hard to just start with whatever vague ideas I have in my head. Any advice for a guy that just wants to write fanfics for fun would be appreciated.

>>30429444
Just start writing ^:)

For real though, that advice is more about the technique of writing rather than the philosophy itself. It's when you go through your first draft of the story with little afterthought, and just let the inspiration/gut feeling/boner carry you. Then you look back at it and fix the stupid shit. It lets you create large amounts of story in a short time, and helps preventing roadblocks - you just write stupid shit and fix it in post.

As to how you start, eh. I dunno, I always kind of liked writing, long before doing horsewords. I don't think I have much to recommend other than - start slow. My first horsefic was a 3 post long oneshot based around a stupid joke. Second one was a stupid Flutterrape gag too. Just find an idea and run with it. If it is shit, delete it. Don't start with epic novels, lest you end writing another AAG.

>>30429444
God I know the feeling. Honestly just toss out all but one idea and try to make it into something, and then take it to its logical conclusion (try not to let this conclusion be "giving up").

>>30429444

Do you truly wish to write for fun? You are really not in it for money? That's a good start.

Buy a copy of How Not to Write a Novel by Mittelmark and Newman. Read it often. Chuck Wendig also gives good advice, but is a bit of an oddball.

Think of a story you would like to read that doesn't exist. Age the idea. If it sticks with you for a few months, that's the one. Write it.

Keep your first stories short like >>30429546 said. 4K-10K short.

Edit the story to the best of your ability. You should go over it at least three times before you show it to somebody.

Find somebody who is willing to read your story and can tell you what you did wrong and what you did right.

Unless you're unusually lucky, you will probably not become famous overnight when you release your first story on the Internet.

Listen to constructive criticism. Always be willing to learn.

Repeat.

If it's more than just a phase, you're going to be at it for quite a while. Good luck.

>>30429444

The reason you won't find true basic-beginner advice on writing is because you already know how to. At least, if you grew up in an English-speaking country you do, because the single biggest topic of your 12-13 years of public education was "fundamentals of writing." Stuff like how to put a sentence together, how to organize information, basic elements of structure and form... you've already learned all of that.

Incidentally, this is one of the big reasons why people are much more dismissive of fanfiction than of fanart; because "everybody can write." This is true, in the sense that everyone has had an extensive educational focus on writing while most people only got art as an occasionally-scheduled elective, but misses the point that - just like with art - really good writing requires a rare combination of innate talent, hard work, and dedication.

bmop

>>30429444
It all starts with an idea. Sometimes that's a synopsis, a scene, a style for the story, a plot point, a character, or a headcanon.

Then comes the hardest part--opening a word processor and writing that idea down, then fleshing it out, then cutting a bunch of it because it's shit and rewriting it, then editing it, then posting it.

For me, daydreaming and thinking about the idea in my head is the best way to not only figure out how I want to write it, but try and flesh it out and cut down on the rewriting a little.

>>30429546
>>30429548
>>30430081
>>30430241
>>30431694
Thanks guys, this really helps. For a while now I've wanted to get into some creative pursuit because I feel like a loser when there are so many people that have their own creative skills in art and programming or even fucking woodcarving. I hate and am terrible at all that stuff, but I've always written well and like constructing stories and characters so I think getting it down on paper is a skill I'll enjoy honing. It's not like my own pony fanfiction and pornography is really something I can show off to friends and family, but hopefully I can eventually create something my fellow degenerates will enjoy.

And congratulations on likely being the most open writing forum online. I really can't think of anywhere else I could ask this so easily and get so much advice.

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>>30426033
>Has it ever been explained in futuristic fanfiction how ponies use computers? Especially keyboards, when you're limited to hooves it must be difficult as fuck

>>30431867
They learned from Strong Bad?

>>30431867

My autistic head-canon has it that those keys can be rotated to different letters, allowing for half the pony alphabet to be on each key and probably causing carpal tunnel for professional typists.

>>30426033
>>30431867
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1KhZKNZO8mQ

page 10? Its more likely than you think

>>30432906
This was an April fool's joke, right? This has to be an April fool's joke...

>>30434306
>Published on Mar 31, 2012
Hmm...

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>>30434306

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>Cadance
>son
I had to check the clusterfuck character chart for this one, since I had absolutely no recollection of Cadance having a son. Turns out she's referring to Dusk Shine, a baby pepsi she adopted for some bullshit reason or another.

If I'm remembering the end of the previous chapter correctly, this whole conversation is in reference to Twilight's plan to cure the nightmare magic poison-itis, which I don't think has been fully explain, except that it apparently requires all three princesses and about half the M6's immediate family to risk their lives, somehow.

>>30435068
>it apparently requires all three princesses and about half the M6's immediate family to risk their lives, somehow.
Are you honestly surprised AAG's plot progressed without FAMILY DRAMA?

>>30435901
I'm mainly wondering what the hell kind of plan this is and why it's so risky. There's also the question of why the princesses are so willing to go along with it, given the possibility that it may take out the entirety of the Equestriani government's leadership, when they're currently at war on two fronts.

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>>30436111
Well... in canon Celestia's really sweet, and gives off this air of serene wisdom, but episode after episode we see her making really questionable decisions.

Like forgiving Discord ("Curse your sudden but inevitable betrayal!"). Like not stripping Twilight of her magic and of her Element after she lost her marbles and wrecked half the town in Lesson Zero--Derpy creates less collateral damage (maybe Derpy can be the new protagonist and new Element of Magic). Like not sending Starlight Glimmer to the moon the first time. Like not turning Discord back into stone after he betrayed her for Tirek, and then sending the stone statue to the sun. And that's not even starting in on all the dumb shit she did in the comics, because supposedly they're not canon.

She's sweet and kind and generous to a fault. You have to love her. Should she be in charge of a country? No.

When you fellas are writing, do you segment your chapters into different documents, or keep them on the same doc?

Alright guys, I need advice
How do I write violence without seeming too edgy
I'm really trying to glaze over detailing the violence itself so it doesnt seem that edgy, but at the same time I dont know how far to go before it just reaches non-sequitur

>>30436977
Punch a random person in the face and write the scene in his blood.

It worked for Hemingway.

>when you lost your old account and you have to go combing trying to find your old favorites
Ech

>>30436393
I do different docs for different chapters. It's easier to keep track of my progress--or lack thereof--that way

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Jesus Christ, this was one hell of a ride.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/10322/fixing-up-miss-smartypants

I stumbled upon 'Fixing Up Miss Smartypants' years ago, and just as with everything else in my life, I threw it aside and told myself I'd get around reading it sooner or later. Well, I finally did and I'm still reeling from it.

The synopsis should give you an idea of what the story will be about: Big Mac has a crush on Twilight and he wants to give her the Smartypants doll back ad a way of starting the conversation and going from there. Perhaps not the most straightforward approach, but it gives a solid start.

Now, the summary also makes it clear everything won't go smoothly thanks to the timely intervention of AJ, Rarity, and the CMC. It's at this point that I should note that I am fine with sprucing up a romance story with a healthy dose of misunderstandings. Sure, I'll take a straigthforward love story at any chance I get, but I've come to expect some shenanigans to go along with my romance.

Would you like to know what I haven't come to expect? Making lists and drawing digrams to keep track of what's going on in a story to the point shinzakura's love octahedrons seem tame in comparison but every once in a blue moon I find a story that merits the effort.

Where do I even begin? You'd think "the beginning" would be a good place, but with as many established relationships, one-sided crushes, and unrequited feelings as this story has going from the get-go, I can't help but wonder if makng a chronological list of events would make more sense.

Well, that's just too bad. You're going to experince this convoluted mess the same way I did, so buckle-up, boys. This one will be a doozy.

>>30438150
As mentioned before, this all starts pretty innocently: Big Mac likes Twilight, and he still has the Smartypants doll from the Lesson Zero debacle, which he hopes can be a good conversation starter with her. He tells as much to Applejack, who isn't quite pleased since she had already envisioned a future where Big Mac brought Fluttershy to Sweet Apple Acres as a wife (more on that later). Big Mac is quick to tell her that Fluttershy made it clear he was a great stallion, but she wasn't interested. AJ begrudgingly acepts this, and agrees to take the doll to Rarity so she can fix it up a little bit before he gives it back to Twilight.

That alone sounds like a decent enough premise for a romantic comedy full of hilarious misunderstandings and love triangles. Too bad it wasn't enough for the author.

See Rarity mistakes AJ's intentions and believes she's the one with a crush on Twilight. Her being Rarity in a romantic comedy, means she immediately sets out to plan a fabulous date for her two friends, complet with dinner reservations at a fancy restaurant. All while keeping it a secret from Applejack, of course. It wouldn't do to spoil the surprise.

Of course, the Crusaders find out and decide to play match-makers in hopes of getting their cutie marks. Since Rarity is already taking care of AJ and Twilight, they decide to get Rarity and Rainbow Dash together. Ain't kids adorable?

Of course, that couldn'tbe the end of it... Oh, no. Soon enough, Spike arrives to Carousel Boutique to deliver some things to Rarity and she tells her to make sure Twilightis ready for her date that night. She tries to be secretive to hide AJ's alleged feelings, but this only leads Spike to believe Rarity is the one with a crush on Twilight. Yeah...

>>30438207
Anyway, since there aren't enough layers, we soon find out that Dash does indeed like Rarity. But thanks to the timely intervention of the CMC and a few well-placed letters, she thinks Rarity is going on a date with Twilight and she is playing a prank on her and lashes out at her only to find out that she liked her back, and has now ruined her only chance.

Oh, and Ditzy is in love with Doctor Whooves, who isn't a thinly veiled expy of Doctor Who, but rather Ditzy and Big Mac's speech therapist.

Eeyup.

Speaking of Big Mac, he also finds out Rarity is supposed to go on a date with Twilight, and thanks to one of the CMC letters, he thinks Twi likes Rarity back.

Anyway, back to an earlier ship, we find that Fluttershy is interested in mares, and the reason why she always dropped by the farm was because she has a crush on Applejack. How do we find out? Why it's a tender scene where she has a small heart to heart with Twilight that goes south quickly once AJ herself arrives and misunderstands the whole situation, leaving in an angry hurry and with Fluttershy thoroughly bummed.

Ah, but who would appear now but none other than the CMC! Ready to explain everything to Fluttershy Does that mean that things will start resolving and wrapping up? Hell, no! It's only chapter three, after all.

So, doctor Whooves likes Ditzy back but blows his chance. AJ thinks Twi was seducing Fluttershy, Granny Smith had a crush on Golden Harvest's grandma way back when, Das and Fluttershy dated a few years ago, AJ thinks she may have been in love with Fluttershy all along and Pinkie is dating Vinyl Scratch.

Let's see, I think that's all. Now we can proceed to the next fleet of ships.

>>30438212
As mentioned, Pinkie is seeing Vinyl, who has recently brokn up with Pinkie's sister, Octavia which--depnding on how long you've been involved with the fandom--is either completely random, or a blast from the past. Amazing how much can change in five years, huh?

Anyway, Pinkie hired Vinyl for a party. A huge, Ponyville-wide party where Lyra will propose to Bon Bon. Oh, and she also got Octavia to come, who just so happened to bring her new marefriend, Trixie.

Hey, remember how this all started s a TwiMac shipfic? Good times.

Anyway, seeing how we're still only halfway through the story, Pinkie starts setting things up to the finale in the most roundabout way possibl with the aid of the CMC. By the way, it's here that we find out that Sweetie Belle has a crush on Spike. There are a bit more twists anspd turns, but fuck it, I want to wrap this up in less than ten posts.

Pinkie invites Princess Luna (with whom she has been corresponding, i.e. Luna likes Pinkie) and has her send letters to all her friends which leads Twilight to believe that her date is with Princess Luna, because every piece of written information only complicates things further, much like the fic itself.

Anyway, back to who was supposed to be the main character of this story, Big Mac finds out about some of the misunderstandings. Only some of them, of course, we wouldn't want to give everything a sensible solution, after all. And hurries to see... Rarity so they can clear things up about her fake date instead of, you know, talk to Twilight.

Rarity herself isn't faring too well after Dash broke her heart, and in a fit of ire, makes Doctor Whooves--who was trying to calm her down so Mac could talk to her--be her date to the event that night. One guess as to how that fares for him and Ditzy.

Anyway, we finally arrive at the party and Pinkie sets up Princess Luna with Twilight because she thought Twi wouldn't have a date.

>>30438225
Note that not once since Twi was asked out on a bind date, has anyone tried to talk with her about it

More misunderstandings happen, Twi actually had a bit of a crush on Mac, but she ees him helping Ditzy find Dinky and tinks they're on a date. Fluttershy believes she doesn't have a chance with AJ so agrees to be Trixie's companion for the night, and then a bunch of convoluted shenanigans take place, and everypony ends with the ones they were supposed to.

...

What the actual fuck. The cover, summary and goddamned title tricked me into believing this would be a fun TwiMac story, but I think they probably had the least screetime. I mean, there as more time spent in RariDash and AppleShy than in the supposed main pairing of the fic.

Smartypants doesn't even get fixed, Trixie ends up taking it with her as she starts travelling again. The story was decently written, but it was filled to the brim with so much drama and ship teases that I found it hard to care.

>>30438239
I love it when fics go completely off the rails.

well I mostly just enjoy it when someone else stumbles across them.

I'm trying to remember another one that iirc appeared to be a twidash shipfic that somehow degenerated into a warfic

>>30438239
Wow, that brings back memories. Not too far, since I stumbled across it long after it finished, but it's been (checks comments)... over two and a half years since I read it. Frig, it's about as much time as had passed at the time since the story *started*. Anyway, your reaction about sums up mine, though at least I was forewarned by TV Tropes.

Also from TV Tropes, there's a sequel that apparently screws things up more, but I haven't read it. Because fuck Happy Ending Overrides.

>>30438150
>shinzakura's love octahedrons seem tame in comparison
I thought you must be exaggerating, since I've seen the fic before and I remembered it wasn't all that long. Then I read the rest of the posts and it sounds like you are absolutely right. Shinzakura should be taking lessons from this guy.

>>30439185
>I haven't read it
I think you really need to

>>30436977
Violence is conflict. Conflict makes a story. Don't be afraid of having characters fight. The violence has to be justified. It should come naturally and not just for the sake of being violent. A character should not suddenly bash another character over the head with a baseball bat out of nowhere unless the character holding the weapon is Jason and the character being hit is a camp counselor. A character should get into a bit of a scuffle with a Tatlzwurm while they are trying to figure out what happened to their pen pal since they are lower on the food chain, but don't poke out any eyeballs or chop off any limbs and go into explicit detail about the buckets of blood brightening up the desert landscape unless that's your aim.

Alternatively, read Cupcakes or Rainbow Factory. Don't do what they are doing unless you're trying to beat them at their own game.

>>30440083
>Alternatively, read Cupcakes or Rainbow Factory. Don't do what they are doing unless you're trying to beat them at their own game.

Is anyone else giggling right now? "This shit right here. DON'T DO THAT."

You know something i hate?

>Read Old Comments from (You)

>>30441183
Yeah, that can make for a painful trip down cringe lane.

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jesus fucking christ
I'm not crying
I'm not,,,

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>>30438773

>>30442495
I'unno... I always imagined shin's stories to follow the model of the Crusades. Seems like a good idea at the beginning, but after you've killed thousands and still haven't reached your goal, you can't help but wonder why you even bothered.

Now from your once in a while whatever program, it's a failures request to write a fic that no one will like.

Brought to you by the smell of shit.

Ask me a prompt and I will write it.

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>>30444365
srsly?

Celestia is hurt while visiting our world--she may be here intentionally or as an accidental result of a magical mishap, but it's irrelevant for the rest of the story. A human comforts her and takes care of her. He falls in love with her but never reveals his feelings, because he doesn't feel worthy. She gets better and leaves. The end. want feelz pls.

>>30444439
sure, lets see if this one works.

>>30444456
Thanks.

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I've had this idea for a long~ish one-shot festering in my mind for a while.

So, at the end of Crystal Empire, Sombra's horn flies away, right? Okay, picture a scene a few years afterwards where Shining Armor is leading a special team of a few Crystal Ponies to find and destroy the remains of Sombra.

The mood as they get ready is rather dour, specially Shining, and just as they're about to leave, he has a flashback of him lying in bed with Cadence.

Cut to the team trekking through the Frozen North. Some random recon lingo as they try to determine how close they are to where they believe Sombra's remains are, when they get attacked by dark magic. A quick battle takes place, but due to a storm picking up strenght, they're overwhelmed.

Shining loses consciousness and has another flashback about him and Cadence, this time they chat a little bit before he wakes up.

Shining and the guards are in a cave. After they were forced to retreat, they took refuge in it and are waiting for the storm to wane. Here Shining finds out there were a few casualties (Flash Sentry, maybe? If I'm going to have deaths I'd prefer it to be of characters that have some sort of relevance rather than simply OC #51) Still, the guards are resolved to carry their mission.

Once the storm has passed, the group once again starts walking. They go through some scenic mountain ranges, frozen woods, and some other nice stuff, before Sombra attacks again. Since they're closer to him, his attacks are stronger, plus they're in the woods so there's more ways ponies can get hurt. Again, Sombra beats their flanks, but this time they make him retreat. One of the guards is badly hurt and is not going to make it, even if they try teleporting back to the Empire, so Shining tries to give him some strength as he dies. He tells them to think about his loved ones, that they will be proud of him, and then the guy expires.

>>30444881
As he dies, Shining once again thinks back to Cadence. They're lying on their bed again and talking about the future.

Back to the present, Shining and the remaining guards are camping at night. The guards are talking amongst themselves (I picture very few are left, probably three or four) as Shining patrols the perimeter. They lament over the loss of their comrades, but accept that they knew death was a possibility when they accepted this mission. The youngest of them is about to make a comment when Shing returns and urges them to remain silent. He extinguishes the fire and soon after, an ursa major walks past them, followed by two minors. The guards are left in awe, and after a while, Shining starts the fire again and tells the youngest guard is his turn to patrol as he goes to sleep.

Shining and Cadence are lying in bed and are discussing possible baby names.

Quick cut to the guards already in battle with Sombra. There are dark crystals coming up from the ground, which makes his attacks stronger. The young guard from last night is the first to go down. This enrages some of the other guards, which causes them to lose focus and they quickly fall victim to Sombra's attacks. This gets to Shining and lets loose, fighting Sombra with all he has. Sombra taunts him, but eventually retreats when Shining starts gaining ground.

Shining is left alone with just one guard. He urges Shining to call off the mission, to go back to the Empire and come back with reinforcements, or to ask Equestria for help. Shining explodes and tells him to run away if he's so scared.

A quick flashback to Cadence lying in bed next to him as they caress her pregnant belly.

Shining yells at the guard, saying he's free to leave but that he's not coming back.

Shining bruses aside a lock of Cadence's hair, revealing a horn covered in black crystals.

>>30444891

Both Shining and the guard are walking up a mountain. The storm is back, but they can see dark magic pulsating from a cave near the top so they pushed forward. They don't speak, not as they walk, not as they reach the cave, not as they enter, and not as they find Sombra.

Once inside, Shining goes all out, with the other guard offering tactical support. Sombra just taunts him, toying with him. When Shining finally lands a hit, Sombra goes for the other guard and kills him. Sombra mocks him for going on a suicide mission and draggin his soldiers with him. He tells him he did a poor job of protecting him, just as he couldn't protect his wife.

There's a quick flash of Shining crying alongside a motionless Cadence in bed.

Shining wants to let his rage take over, but manages to calm himself down. He says he accepts this, he accepts that he failed his family and his empire, and he knows this was a suicide mission, but he doesn't care. He has already lost the most important things in his life, so he doesn't mind ending his own if it means taking Sombra with him.

Sombra is unimpressed and goes for the offensive, while Shining casts a shield spell around his ethereal form. Sombra thrashes around, but the shield spell is too strong, too strong even for Shining. He starts bleeding from his nose, but doesn't let the spell go. Sombra yells at him, insults him and taunts him, but he doesn't let up. Slowly, he starts making the shield contract. Sombra lets out angry screams as the cave starts rumbling.

Shining is lying next to Cadence in bed, they're talking about the future.

There's a rumbling sound as a mountain collapses.

Cadence says she loves him. Shining says he loves her too.

Thoughts?

>>30444899
Am I a terrible person for saying I saw this coming almost from the first flashback?

It isn't exactly subtle. It's pretty obvious that you're going for this as a recurring motif in the story. It's also obvious, when named characters start dying, that this is a darkfic.

It could work. An author could work with this. But it's predictable, and the predictability robs the ending of impact.

>>30444931
>Am I a terrible person for saying I saw this coming almost from the first flashback?
No, it just means you have functional reading comprehension skills.

I guess it would work better if the flashbacks worked as a mean to build-up Shining's eventual decision of self-destruction rather than an attempt at an unsurprising surprise twist. Perhaps using them less constantly.

>It isn't exactly subtle.
I'm not trying to be. I want to tell a story about loss and dealing with pain, though perhaps I still have some kinks to work.

>>30444931
I'm sorry. Let me make this more clear. I want to rephrase some things. Maybe I'm not communicating as well as I could.

The flashbacks to talking about babies and the future with Cadence, always being inserted at a time when Shiny is in danger--it's obvious, from the first time I see it mentioned, that this is going to be the recurring motif of the story.

When you start killing characters off--even if it IS just "unnamed guard #3"--you're already going to a place much, much darker than the show or the source material ever went. I'm not saying this is bad--but it also makes it very clear this is a darkfic and darkfic generally doesn't have happy endings.

Put that together with "Hero dies leaving pregnant wife behind" being a trope of tragedy--I am trying very hard not to use the word "cliche"--going back to Homer and Sophocles if not further. Well, you can see it coming down the Interstate from here.

This isn't bad in and of itself. But it's a little predictable. And that robs the ending of some of the power it could have had.

>>30444978
Oh, perhaps I should have made something clearer, and that will put the story into even darker territory.

Cadence is dead, and Flurry Heart died with her (The original idea for this story came to be before babycorn was a thing), which is why Shining has very little reservations to go on a suicide mission. Sombra left a little something of his behind and infected Cadence, which didn't manifest until much later, and it was too late to save her (or the baby) by then. This was all meant to be in the backdrop, though, and only be more or less confirmed with the final showdown.

Anyway, you still make a good point. The underlying story itself is predictable, and if I were to remove the flashbacks completely and leave Shining's motivations a mystery until the final confrontation with Sombra, then it robs the story of what little depth it has.

I'm still going to mull this over and see how I can polish it further. It's not as though I have a shortage of other things to write anyway.

>>30445090
Yeah, that's pretty bleak.

I get the desire to write some dark things myself but I try to restrain myself. I tell myself I shouldn't.

Darkfic is not popular, people don't enjoy it, because pony-related stuff is, among other things, for some of us an escape from a world that can already seem kind of dark, and the things I enjoy reading, and the things I enjoy writing for people, are light banter-y comedic stuff. Or maybe dark comedy. I wrote this earlier:

>>30443355

I have bleak stuff in my mind that wants to be written as a story, but I am not convinced that it would serve any positive purpose to do so. I get zero positive response when I talk about my ideas anyway.

>>30436393
Same doc. Then I'd copypaste it into gdocs to transfer to Fimfic, or make a new document and convert to a pdf for DeviantART.

>>30436977
What kind of story is it? There's many kinds of violence (domestic abuse for the dramatic shipping, comedy slapstick, warfic shit, etc.) and it really depends on the story to choose which one you'll use.

Outcome is also important. You can have a lot of violence (punching, kicking, etc.) that doesn't leave a lasting impact on the characters (bruises, maybe some cuts). Again, its all about the plot and what kind of violence you intend to use.

>>30441183
You know what I hate more?
>Read Old Comments from (You) praising/getting pissed at a story you've completely forgotten about

>>30444881
>Sombra returns
>not immediately retreating back to the Crystal Empire and getting the princesses and/or a fuckton of troops
>Cadance not immediately asking Equestria for help the second she got fucked up
I know characters acting stupid to keep the plot moving isn't new, but it still annoys me.nonetheless.

>>30444899
Seems like too many scenes. You could get by with fewer Cadance flashbacks (maybe even reduce them to momentary images that flash through Shining's mind), and starting the story closer to the final assault on Sombra. The front end of the story doesn't seem like it's doing all that much.

AAG TOMORROW

GET HYPE

Also apparently the author had to split the chapter or something, so he's promising ANOTHER chapter after tomorrow's. Hell must have truly frozen over.

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>>30446921
I'm at the edge of my seat.

>>30446921
so much insane bullshit that one chapter just cant contain it all

>>30438773
>a twidash shipfic that somehow degenerated into a warfic
Could it be this one?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/222613/hold-your-color
I remember liking the previous story. It was a fun TwiDash romance through scenic pony Europe. Then this appeared and didn't know what to make of it.

>>30443682
Bump.

OH GOD THERE'S A NEW AAG CHART

WITH PICTURES INSTEAD OF CHANGELINGS!

>>30449278
I demand evidence.

>>30449336
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/746666/in-memory-of-the-princess-laquisha-shanene-memorial-turnpike

>>30449345
>https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/746666/in-memory-of-the-princess-laquisha-shanene-memorial-turnpike
>blog/746666
>746666
>6666
AAG confirmed for spawn of Satan

>>30449345
>Take heed, dear readers. By this time tomorrow this chart will no longer be entirely accurate. Assuming, of course, it ever was in the first place....
Fucking hell.

>>30449434
That was Flynt Coal, though, so where does he fit into the madness that is AAG?

>>30449466
He's apparently an editor for AAG and has written his share of side-stories.

Does it really surprise you? He wrote one of the sidestories, so he's all up in that shit.

My depression at still not having caught up (one of these days, I'm closing in on Triptych first) is offset by my bemusement at Shin trolling a commenter who has no idea what this is all about. And getting downvotes for it.

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>>30449278
>animu characters
>Umbridge
>random EqG fanart
>Benedict Cumberbatch
>literally Obama
>M. A. motherfucking Larson
It's beautiful

>>30450564
Is it just me, or there are more types of character relationships?

>>30450564
Wait...why is Raspberry Beryl on this chart?

>>30450600
its more complicated now? is that even possible?

>>30451025
Everything is possible for the shin.
But I honestly do not remember the previous chart. Did it have a line for coca cola siblings?

>>30450564
Is it time for that one anon who said he'd make the physical string chart..to proceed with his insane plan?

>>30451094
He's gonna need more yarn.

>>30450564
>M. A. motherfucking Larson
I was confused for a moment, because I thought Larson appeared in the story as well, but then I remember those were Lauren Faust and John DeLancie.
Man, this story is bonkers.

>>30451432
>Lauren Faust and John DeLancie
Who as far as I can tell are only on there to note they have no relation whatsoever to Faust A'Licorne (at least I've gotten to her) and Eris DeLancie? I can't even be sure of the colors.

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>>30451836
that could be fun if just anyone could help edit the master chart by adding random shit. itd be no less nonsensical than whats already there

>>30450600
Nope, that part is the same as the old chart. In fact, aside from the images, the only changes I see are the addition of Sable Loam (a.k.a. Edgelord McWerewolf) at the top left, and Button Mash and Raspberry Beryl at the bottom-center.

>>30451009
I don't know but I find it very concerning. Hopefully it's just a minor cameo, like DJ's appearance in 7DSJ.

>>30453292
I thought there was a massive "crush" line between Celestia and Mike, did that get turned into the 'dating' line between Celestia and Sam?

And Raspberry Beryl seems to be only relevant by being friends with Silversteel somehow. Maybe it was in one of those prequel sidestories?

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>>30453667
>I thought there was a massive "crush" line between Celestia and Mike, did that get turned into the 'dating' line between Celestia and Sam?
You're right. There's also a new "engaged but never married" between Derpy and Silversteel. The new characters also got some lines: Sable Loam got tied in to the "Allies (Good)" group, Raspberry Beryl is "great friends" with Silversteel, and Button Mash is "no relationship whatsoever" with Sweetie Belle. The only other change is the green and purple at the top, which is actually nothing - Mike's connection to the "allies (good)" was rerouted around the other side of Mahogany's box.

>And Raspberry Beryl seems to be only relevant by being friends with Silversteel somehow. Maybe it was in one of those prequel sidestories?
Her name's mentioned a few times in Kind Hearts and Coronets. Apparently she runs a jewelry store in Ponyville and Sparkler is her apprentice. I don't know how this makes her "great friends" with Silversteel, but at least there's a slight connection there.

ITS LIVE

AAG LIVES AGAIN

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ARE YA READY, KIDS!?

HEY GUYS I HEARD YOU LIKE LOVE TRIANGLES

>“Wow, I did not know she still had a thing for him,” Lyra said softly. DJ merely looked at her, as if expecting an answer.
>She got an answer, but not from the person she was expecting it from.
>“The mare’s name is Honeysuckle, and she was close friends with Minty; she also had a thing for Elusive. However, she was the daughter of Guard parents who got reassigned elsewhere, and that’s when your brother met Apple Butter. Times changed, the Guard became the military, and Honeysuckle joined the latter, returning to Ponyville to find your brother engaged.” They turned to see Spitfire standing there, looking at them both.

Everyone is in pony NORAD to watch some big event and Elusive is off in the corner talking to some military officer who apparently still has the hots for him
This is literally the SECOND PAGE

>>30450564
Jesus H. Christ.

I can't decide whether this is serious or some kind of joke.

Either way they need to make it into a 3D arrangement, and turn that into an animated .gif that rotates, because Love Dodecahedron.

>>30454036
Shin, I know you pretend not to come here because we're lame and don't get your genius, but I honsetly love you and hope you never stop writing.

>>30454036
It's been three hours, so I must assume you've succumbed to the all-american power of Shin.

>>30454052
>implying three dimensions are enough
>implying that diagram doesn't demand an animated Love Tesseract

>AAG, chapter 25, part 1
All right, here's the deal. Way the fuck back in chapter 2, Twilight, RD, AJ, and Rarity got hit with some nightmare-powered magic poison virus thingy. After a few months just sitting around waiting to die, Twilight and AJ were both cured by the power of H O P E. In this chapter, Twilight finally gets to try out her plan to cure the rest of them. But first, a bunch of other random shit has to happen.

DJ, Lyra, and Elusive (Rarity's son) chill at Pony NORAD for a while, then get escorted off to the VIP room. Surprise! The VIP room is a bank vault and their escort is Chrysalis. She locks them in and wanders off to secretly take over the rest of Pony NORAD.

There are two other prisoners in the bank vault with them. The first is some kind of alternate, non-Hitler version of Sunset Shimmer, who promptly became my favorite character in the entire series:
> "You have a coltfriend?" Cerise interjected. "Lemme guess: Heart Monitor, or Good Medicine?"
> [Sunset:] "Could we talk about that later?"

The other prisoner is Chatoyance:
> "Lord Elusive, how could you stand to be with this betrayer?" [Cerise] asked him. "She stepped in the way of everything you and your family stand for! And you’re with this…this…human?"
> Elusive looked at the woman, finding it more than a bit ironic that she would use her own species’ name as an epithet towards DJ.

Now back to our regularly scheduled nonsense. Celestia, Luna, and Cadance are getting ready for their part in Twilight's grand plan. Luna decides this is a great time to discuss her (lack of) love life: Luna is butthurt because Celestia is getting laid now and she's not, so says she's going to abdicate and go live on human-earth with her husbando Robin, just as soon as they're done with whatever it is they're doing. The princesses go from 0 to QUADRUPLE YELLING in half a page, then calm right the fuck back down in another half-page and go off to do their actual jobs.

>>30455273
>aag, chapter 25, part 2
It's time for some warfic bullshit. Mr. Taco is sends a bunch of pepsis and Iranians off in fancy new fighter jets to blow up Canterlot and Equestria's one aircraft carrier. These jets were custom-designed and built in about two months by a bunch of kidnapped nuclear physicists, so obviously they're packed with the latest and greatest in both electronics and magitech. Also, Mr. Taco bought 100 older fighter jets and brought them through the portal, without anyone ever noticing that the actual Equestriani government neither wanted nor paid for 100 fighter jets, solely for the purpose of target practice for his shiny new "Privateers".

Next, we finally find out the princesses' part of the plan. They're going to channel a shitload of magic from the sun, the moon, and wherever love comes from, and send it to Twilight so she can blow up the nightmare magic poison-itis. This apparently involves flying around in a circle really fast and chanting in broken Latin.

Suddenly, out of nowhere: it's Nightmare Moon! It's Chrysalis! It's Mr. Taco's magitech fighter jets! It's 100,000 changelings! I don't know how you make 100,000 changelings appear out of nowhere, but Chrysalis apparently managed it, because the Equestriani military had no idea they were nearby.


This is about where I stopped reading. Some outrageous fraction of the Equestriani military has been patrolling Canterlot on high alert since the start of this chapter, and now that they finally know where the bad guys are, they're getting BTFO. But I'm only about halfway through the chapter at this point, so I'm sure there's more insanity to come.

>>30455273
>Chatoyance

oh god no, please tell me you're joking

Also, you're making this sound really, really bad, maybe possibly borderline "so bad it's good" territory, maybe not. Are you intending to make the story sound like The Eye of Argon, with ponies?

>>30455316
>oh god no, please tell me you're joking
Mostly joking. The character's actual name is Cerise, in case you missed it. But considering she's spent most of her time so far talking about how great ponies are and using "human" as a slur, calling her "Chatoyance" seemed appropriate.

>Also, you're making this sound really, really bad, maybe possibly borderline "so bad it's good" territory, maybe not
Unlike 7DSJ, where the plot is actually somewhat interesting IMO, I only read AAG for the pure insanity of it. Also keep in mind, I don't normally mention the average or reasonable parts of AAG chapters. Nobody cares about those. Though this chapter has been awfully short on "average" and "reasonable" so far.

>>30455385
I agree.

Does "Pepsis" mean "South Koreans," incidentally? If not, could you explain so I don't have to risk my own brain cells trying to read about Mr. Taco's Evil Plan myself?

>>30455410
>Does "Pepsis" mean "South Koreans," incidentally?
Literally what?

No, the upgraded bugpones are actually called "pepsis warriors". "Pepsis" being some kind of insect-related biology term.

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>>30455277
>Mr. Taco bought 100 older fighter jets and brought them through the portal
I've missed you so much, AAG.

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>>30455456
>Literally what?
I have heard South Koreans called "Pepsis" because image related.

>>30455277
>Also, Mr. Taco bought 100 older fighter jets and brought them through the portal, without anyone ever noticing that the actual Equestriani government neither wanted nor paid for 100 fighter jets

Mr. Taco cleverly distracted the Princesses by stealing 40 cakes first. And that's made you look.

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>>30455641
u cheeky lil cunt

>>30455277
When do you expect your mental faculties will recover to finish the chapter?

Have they ever explained how Nightmare Moon and Chrissy met up in the first place? What each of them is planning to get out of this, are they a Big Bad Duumvirate or is one of them dominant, etc.

>>30456312
from the way it was explained, i thought it was cryssy all slutted up to look like NMM

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>>30457165
That might be hawt.

Chryssy's already kind of slutty looking with that dark green eye shadow. I kind of like it.

>>30457219
I want to have consensual lovemaking with Queen Chrysalis.

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>>30457246
Luv Bug is Best Bug.

to be more serious, I am torn. On the one hand, she's sexy as hell--Kathleen Barr's voice acting for the character is absolutely thrilling. She sounds like a dominatrix. I also think the character design has a certain austere beauty--lots of ponies and other characters are pretty, but few are beautiful, and Bugbutt makes the short list. And I absolutely adore her unapologetic Saturday morning cartoon supervillainess boasting and strutting, I love how determined she is to win.

On the other hand, she is pointlessly cruel, even when she has nothing to gain from it. I think she's very hot--but not very nice. I am attracted to her but I don't like her. This makes no sense, I know.

>>30457329
>those spoilers
Have you by any chance read Changeling Courtship Rituals? It deals with just that. And cultural differences regarding relationships as well as a bit of law, but mostly what you mentioned about the contradictory aspects of Chrysalis personality.

Actually, the sequel--Pony Courtship Rituals--is vastly better at that, and is a more enjoyable story overall, but you kinda have to read the first one, uh, first.

>>30457566
I haven't.

The Bugfic through which I am currently working my way is "Chrysalis Visits the Hague," which I've mentioned in these threads before. It's so dark that I have to spend some days or weeks reflecting on the material, and reading lighter fare to cleanse my reading palate (so to speak), before I can read another chapter.

>>30457566
can i get a link to this story?

>>30457674
Sure. Here's the first one:

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/299781/changeling-courtship-rituals

And the sequel:

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/350412/pony-courtship-rituals

As I said, the first one is pretty good, but the sequel is definitely the more solid story. The romance is better, and the character interactions have a nicer feel to them, whereas getting at that point was more or less the plot of the story.

Anyway, they're fairly short. I read both in a single sitting and don't regret it.

>>30457736
>whereas getting at that point was more or less the plot of the story.
The plot of the first story, I mean.

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>>30457736
thanks it seems cute and has my two favourites

>>30457638
That story seems weird in the way I may enjoy. I'll give it a look.

>>30455932
Finished reading already, I'll try to write it up later today.

>>30456312
>Have they ever explained how Nightmare Moon and Chrissy met up in the first place?
Not sure

>What each of them is planning to get out of this
I think they might have discussed it once, but I don't remember.

>are they a Big Bad Duumvirate or is one of them dominant
They're doing the typical villain thing, working together for now but each planning to backstab the other (weaker) one as soon as they've taken over Equestria.

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So, what are you working on, Anons?
Surely you aren't lazying around not being productive, right?

>>30459752
Non-pone stuff.

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>>30459765
I hope you have an acceptable excuse for that.

>>30458883
I find it very dark, and with each chapter it gets more bleak. One particular thing that has come to stay in my mind is--well, let me spoiler it, you can decide whether to read it.

The story is very dark. Ponies hunt down, torture, and kill Changelings wherever and whenever they are discovered--making their accusations against her hypocritical at best. When there is open battle and the ponies capture Changelings, they usually don't take prisoners--they execute them out of hand. Celestia, hundreds of years back, killed thousands of Changeling prisoners by magically compelling them to march into a volcano, and forced Chrysalis to watch. Changelings are cruel and ruthless. The aftereffects of spending an extended time on one of those green goo bubble things they use to drain their victims of magic can be lethal if the ponies within are just broken out by someone who doesn't know the proper spells. It is not the cutesy sugar-bowl world we see on the show.

Chrysalis has, at the point where I've been reading, continuously insulted and threatened her court-appointed lawyer, refused to cooperate, and been as obnoxious as possible. She said early on that she does not expect to survive, that she thinks all of this is an elaborate ploy to subject her to a mockery of a trial to humiliate her before they execute her. The ponies participating in the trial, including an Equestrian judge sent to the Hague, agree, and are okay with this. Everything that her human lawyer asks her to do, to help in her defense, she refuses.

I think she's trying to get them to kill her quickly without further torture--she's already been beaten and tortured with electric shocks, and much worse, by bored human guards. She isn't human. We can't analyze her with human psychology, not really, but intent can be inferred from predictable outcomes. I think she wants to take her secrets to the grave, to protect her people.

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>>30460113
My intrigue grows further, as does my morbid curiosity.

>>30459856
I don't have any pone stories to tell anymore.

>>30460323
Tell us about the last pone story you told.

Is Knighty English? I just noticed the "favourites" folder is spelled with a u.

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>>30459752
dirty smut

>>30460591
He could just be one of them tits that prefers shite to shit and all that.

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>>30460757
I request additional information.

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>>30460774
sex

I'm looking into reading some cute lesbian horse stories, not exactly lewd or straight on nsfw but something cute and heart warming. I haven't had any ideas to draw and I guess that could help me a bit. Please link me some.

>>30460806
Any particular ships?

>>30460825
Any really.

Anyone other than me waiting with bated breath for the recap of the second half of the new AAG?

>>30460967
The first recap was so intense I don't know if my heart can take any more.

>>30460928
This one is pretty nice. I read it recently.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/58583/no-recipe-for-perfection
There's also these: >>30457736 if bug love strikes your fancy.

>>30460497
The very last one would happen to be a shitty writeoff piece not worth talking about.
Before that I can't remember for sure, might have been a comedy oneshot.
Never wrote much in the first place.

>aag, chapter 25, part 3
Last we saw, the princesses were flying at mach 6 in circles above the ruined hospital, channeling magical energy from their respective spheres to Twilight. (Note that the hospital wasn't ruined by the perpetual sonic boom emanating from the three alicorns, because there isn't one, but rather by a changeling attack a few chapters ago.) But just as they get wound up, NMM attacks Celestia, Chrysalis attacks Luna, and changelings and Mr. Taco's magical jetplanes attack the legions of troops who have just been hanging around in Canterlot all chapter long.

Celestia summons her sword to fight Nightmare Moon. It doesn't work, so she summons her other sword, and her OTHER other sword, and fights NMM with all three at once. But because this is AAG, they don't just fight, they also discuss some family drama at the same time.
> “You think me a creation of Luna’s madness, but that was never true. I existed long before either of you. I came into being at the same time as my sister: your aunt, Faust.”
> “Such a naïve little foal, thinking because the lone surviving alicorn raised her that she must’ve spat her out of her cunt.” The Nightmare laughed cruelly. “Listen, little princess, for I will tell you a True Thing: You’re not Faust’s daughter…
> “…you’re mine.”
OH EM GEE.

But enough about them, let's talk about bug horse. Luna basically beats her sorry ass and leaves her for dead. (Spoilers: she doesn't die.)

The changelings are fucking up literally everything. But DJ and friends break out of Pony NORAD's VIP bank vault (thanks to DJ having inherited dear ol' dad's "Monolith" strength and being literally bigger than Big Mac), break into Pony NORAD's control room, and mash buttons at random until a bunch of big fuckin' guns appear from nowhere. Specifically, 37 cannons firing changeling-seeking crystal grenades, which were hidden under various rooftops all over Canterlot. The changelings promptly get BTFO.

>>30461697
>aag, chapter 25, part 4
Mr. Taco's magical jetplanes come in to destroy the guns before they do too much damage. But Rainbow Blitz and his non-magical jetplanes show up just in time to fight them. The gryphon air force also comes to help for some reason.

On the ground, all the important male characters in the story (except Elusive, who was in the VIP vault) are fighting bugs, when NMM shows up to fuck with them. She grabs Edgelord and breaks his neck to show how serious and evil she is. She picks up Sam next, but unfortunately Celestia spots her at this point. Seeing NMM fucking with her husbando enables Celestia to unleash her full power, like so:
> “NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!”
> From where she’d stood, Celestia became light and rocketed forward, slamming into Nightmare and sending both careening into a building diagonal from where the group were. She continued to hammer the Nightmare, stronger than she’d ever hit anypony before in her life. The blows thundered and caused shockwaves as they went through building after building.
> “YOU WILL NEVER TOUCH HIM!” she roared. “YOU WILL DIE, HERE AND NOW, FIEND!”
(Spoilers: she doesn't die. She is forced to retreat, though.)

Now that the battle is pretty much won, Celestia and Luna rejoin the mach-6 magic party, where poor Cadance has been flying in circles alone. Twilight isn't done with the spell, but she's still safe for now thanks to her pepsi daughter Shining Dawn, who has shapeshifted into Twilicorn and is DBZ'ing any changelings who come near. When the magic party picks up again, she finishes the spell, which burns away all the nightmare magic poison-itis, makes a big rainbow that turns into magical singing alicorns, blasts all the remaining changelings out of the city, and heals all the wounded soldiers.

Hooray! The good guys won. Now it's time for some kind of epilogue, I guess, followed by the start of Book II.

>>30461697
>“Listen, little princess, for I will tell you a True Thing: You’re not Faust’s daughter…
> “…you’re mine.”
I kinda want to make a new account just so I can downvote this again.

>>30461697
>>30461698
This sounds batshit insane, but not in the good way.

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>>30461698
>“YOU WILL DIE, HERE AND NOW, FIEND!”
>(Spoilers: she doesn't die.)
I fucking lost it.

>>30461697
>>30461698
Ok what the actual fuck. That's not ok. That's just terrible. When will Shink be institutionalized?

>>30461697
>>30461698
Christ, the dialogue in this piece of horse-anime seems terrible.

Why the fuck wasn't anyone using those anti-Changeling guns already? Why are they homing grenade launchers?
Why doesn't Celestia know who her mother is? Who knocked up Nightmare Moon?
Why?

>>30461771
>Christ, the dialogue in this piece of horse-anime seems terrible.
Dialog takes up a lot of characters, I only include the really "good" stuff.

>Why the fuck wasn't anyone using those anti-Changeling guns already?
They're controlled by Pony NORAD, which was already taken over by Chrysalis and her infiltrators, before the attack began.

>Why are they homing grenade launchers?
They are specifically "rotary cannons", firing "a 40mm shell designed to split up into dozens of crystalline spikes, magically designed to hunt for changeling blood and kill them as quickly and painlessly as possible". It's designed to be effective against large numbers of small, highly maneuverable targets.

>Why doesn't Celestia know who her mother is?
By the sound of it, Faust raised her pretty much since she was born. And NMM had apparently been defeated, so she wasn't around to explain things.

>>30461814
>a 40mm shell designed to split up into dozens of crystalline spikes, magically designed to hunt for changeling blood and kill them as quickly and painlessly as possible
At that point why not just create an anti-changeling spell?

>>30461829
>all AMERICAN girl
muh guns

>>30461771
>Who knocked up Nightmare Moon?
Me!
>Why?
Because you have to admit she's kind of hot, with that supervillainess thing she's got going on.

I finished my first multi-chapter fanfic.

Without your help.

>>30462507
Reading or writing?

>>30462517
Writing. I've never completed authoring a fanfic with more than a single chapter before.

I don't think I would require assistance from 4chan to read a story...

>>30462556
>I don't think I would require assistance from 4chan to read a story...

You might not, but I sometimes do.

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>>30441183
>>30441730
>>30446039
>2013
>"Oh please,i join 4 year service in military. (Fuck the instructor, That a fucking hell day ever)"
>2017
Cringe worthy as hell, What wrong with me.

>Nine Tales Of Equestria
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/322457/nine-tales-of-equestria
NO NO NO NO! FUCKING NACUTO.

>>30462740
There are three thigns I do not welcome as crossovers when I am reading any type of fanfiction, poni or otherwise.

One of them is the Blue Hedgehog of Autism. The second is magic ninja assassins in fluorescent colored clothing. The third is pocket-cockfighting-monsters of any kind or form, whether the original or of the many knockoff series intended to ride its coattails.

There are others, but it takes me a bit to think of them.

>>30462556
>I don't think I would require assistance from 4chan to read a story...
sometimes its a great help

>>30462740
>nine-tales
>nine tales
>its not a compendium of short stories, but rather a misspelling in the gorram title

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So, Apple Family accents.
Do you write them or not? Does it bother you when authors go full bumpkin' with it?

>>30463649
I write bits of them, like eliding the final "g" on gerunds and the present participle, but I don't go full retard with it. I do try to add "countryisms" I've heard real country folk use, as long as they won't be too distracting.

I'm asking semi-seriously for semi-serious opinions about an idea I have, because fanfiction is not serious business.

Some of you may be familiar with Estee's "Canterlot Deportation Agency" stories, which may or may not be canon to his "Triptych Continuum" 'verse.

I have a notion to play in the CDA sandbox a bit, and Estee has said, canonically, that a non-trivial number of humans show up in Equestria and some can't leave immediately or be sent back immediately. If you know the CDA 'verse, you know exactly why humans aren't welcome in Equestria.

I've asked the author and it's canon that the only interdimensional travelers they get are humans and ponies. No aliens, not even any other Equestrian intelligent species.

And, because my mind is weird and I've been on an S&M Stirling kick lately, what if a visitor to Equestria was, perhaps, one of a certain race of genetically engineered posthumans? Who have their good points and their bad points, and who are basically genre-savvy Villain Sues in their own universe, and who regard "baseline" humans other than their ancestors in the specific culture that created them to be either deadly enemies or slaves, nothing in between, and who were hormonally and instinctively hardwired this way because their ancestors admired certain psychological traits--aggressiveness, decisiveness, logical and mathematical intelligence, stubbornness, and did I mention aggressiveness?--so much that they made their posthuman descendants into supergenius superaggressive manipulative psychopaths with an instinctive Will to Power that would make Nietszche shit his pants.

What if one of THEM shows up in Equestria, was the question I asked myself.

Is this salvageable or is it shit?

>>30455277
>kidnapped nuclear physicists
So they have superb neutron absorption and the latest SCRAM technology, but can't actually fly? You'd think they'd kidnap aeronautic engineers to build airplanes.

>>30459752
Been reading novels. The Never Ending Sacrifice, a DS9 novel, was a solid 9/10. First half was great, while the second half sagged because of the Dominion fucking up all the cool Cardassian worldbuilding and politics.

I've been trying to read Watership Down but it really feels like Adams is rushing through things in the early chapters. I know the warren's supposed to be destroyed, but you can still develop the characters a little before they go on their grand journey. I don't really care about Fiver because I barely even know anything about the guy.

>>30463649
The Applejack Fanfic Accent always annoys me, but I do try to mimic their style of speech as much as possible. It's a part of their characterization.

>>30463805
Sounds pretty shit IMO. Not because of anything Estee said (you're writing a fanfic of a fanfic, who even gives a shit what's even canon any more), but because the race you're talking about sounds like it was made up by an edgy 14-year-old Less Wrong user.

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>>30462055
Those two purple spots on her belly are cute as hell, too.

>>30463649
I reckon you can do a right fine job of capturing Apple voices without up and spelling like a retard.

>>30463649
Yeah, I try to capture their accent.

Not sure I could pull off Babs Seed, though.

>>30462740
>>30462813
Trying to find the source of cancer is easy.
>Naruto's Monstrous Daily Life!
>Naruto the Very Strange Human
>Naruto The New Life
>Naruto Blonde Maelstrom
>Naruto Life as a Host Family
>Naruto the Husband of a Monster
>Naruto Police Academy Idea
>Naruto Jigsaw Uzumaki
>Naruto The Bakugan Brawler
>Naruto The Legend of K-pop
>Naruto: Rise of the Prince of the North Korean

>>30463805
You're talking a lot of big words but in the end all I see is a bunch of evil übermensch invading Equestria. It's shit, but with enough pretentiousness you might find an audience.

>>30462813
>Accepting crossovers in any form.

Seriously, of the various fandoms I've read fic in over the years the only crossover I've found that wasn't totally intolerable was Pony and Doctor Who, and even then I prefer more Pony than Doctor Who. Like that one major Doctor Whooves comic, the one with like six books, isn't as good as other things because it's more of a doctor who story than a Pony story.

The early radio plays aren't bad.

I have one last opportunity to have my story on the front page under "Recent Updates". After that I'm completely done.

Anything I can do to get my story noticed this one last time on the front page?

>>30465153
What about dexter?

>>30465172
The boy genius, or the serial killer?

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>>30450564
I'd never think I would see a chart with Ashens, Cumberdick Benepatch, Rarity, Rarity, Gay Rarity and Macaulay Culkin on it.

>>30464482
An author named Stirling created them. The Draka are the ones I'm talking about, specifically what they genetically engineered their descendants to be after conquering Earth. You may google for them if you want.

The tl;dr version is, the author decided he was tired of happy endings and wanted to write about a dystopia and about competent villains, and he kind of made them Villain Sues who have an "I Win" button they keep pressing.

I find them fascinating because, among other things, for all that they look more or less like tall, really physically fit white people, they are really rather alien. They were as intelligent as their creators could make them, with IQs in the 180 range or higher--but at the same time they were created to have instincts their creators admired, and those instincts, to conquer, never to back down from a fight, and so on, drive them so strongly that it makes their behavior rather predictable to anyone who's familiar with them.

These instincts have so much control over them that, for all that they speak, and reason, and make tools, it is in a sense questionable whether they truly have free will in the same sense that we (or ponies) do, and though their creators said they wanted them "to have no more between themselves and their naked will than a wolf has," and yes, Draka philosophers talk like that, they are creatures of instinct. Dogs bark, birds fly, fish swim, Draka kill and conquer, like a single-celled organism, like some sort of mindless reflex-arc thing responding blindly to stimulus. They were born this way, built this way, made this way, like meat robots, by people who thought this would be really cool. I wanted to explore a rather different question: can one of these people, perhaps one who's been accidentally separated from her world and people, learn to override her instincts and adapt? Can a genetically engineered conqueror learn about friendship?

>>30465248
The boy genius.

>>30464943
>You're talking a lot of big words
Gawrsh, Jethro! Really?

>but in the end all I see is a bunch of evil übermensch invading Equestria.

Where are you looking that you're seeing this, since I'm talking about one übermensch--or, rather, überwench--ending up there alone by accident, with nothing but the clothes she's wearing.

I guess poor reading comprehension and a poor vocabulary go together, so none of this should surprise me. Are you a nigger? Sheeyit muhfugga dem big words 'n' shit, ain't nobody got time fo dat!

>>30459752
I've been reading Pratchett, and I'm about to read The Hero with a Thousand Faces. Been working a lot recently though, so I haven't felt like reading much.

>>30462813
>Blue Hedgehog of Autism
I seriously fucking wonder why Sonic, out of all the possible fandoms out there, is such an unparalleled hive of legitimate autism. I get that it probably has to do with appealing to a certain demographic and hitting at the right time(s) (meaning that many Sonic autists are young adults or actual adults right now), but it's still interesting.

I'd read an academic study that thoroughly explained why Sonic and related fandoms are as bad as they are, if one existed.
Though it would probably suck. Reminds me of that study someone did ages ago that was supposed to be an analysis of Morrowind (Ashlanders in particular), and they got it all wrong.

>>30463649
I don't write much AJ in the first place, but I try to mimic the show, although I'm usually a a fair bit lighter on the accents and the countryisms. Mainly because I'm not American, so I figure it's best to do a subdued accent but get it right, rather than use it a lot and get it wrong.
That said I legitimately can't remember the last time I wrote anything for her. I like her well enough, I just don't find myself wanting to write anything for her.

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>>30465579
>I seriously fucking wonder why Sonic, out of all the possible fandoms out there, is such an unparalleled hive of legitimate autism.

To be entirely fair, wherever you see the word "fandom" you may be sure that the word "autism" is nearby, possibly watching from the bushes and masturbating.

Trekkies, Pokeymans fans, weeaboos, koreaboos. And not just these areas--lots of hobbies are full of them. Coin collecting, stamp collecting, photography, are full of human trainwrecks who make Chris-chan or Chatoyance look altogether calm, reasonable, and sane by comparison. Even some "normie" interests--there are people who like baseball, and there are people who memorize player statistics the way fanatics living in caves in Afghanistan memorize the Koran. It isn't everyone involved with such things, it isn't even most people, but you'll find it everywhere if you look.

For that matter there's more than a little autism and other bad craziness in the pony fandom too.

You say that S*nic the H*dgeh*g attracts that sort of thing disproportionately. You may be right. I know I've been seeing a lot of horrifyingly cringey fanwork based on it for a lot of years now. You can type your question into Google and see a lot of speculation--"simple brightly colored character design + hero with 'coo'" superhuman abilities + simple black-and-white morality = autism magnet," but superhero comics have had that stuff for eighty years. Not saying capeshit doesn't attract autists, but nothing like the H*dgeh*g does. I really don't know.

Hmm. Does anyone now want to write "Autist in Equestria?"

>>30465764
It's probably because it has simple, cookie cutter design and personality for all the characters, as well as a very open and friendly universe that frequently introduces new throwaway characters. And those throwaway characters also frequently befriend the main characters. The autist wouldn't need to search hard at all to find good reason for their shitty OC to find friendship and sexytimes with Sonilight Sparkchu.

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>>30465789
That exists, by the way.
I've seen more sensible characters in the book of Ezekiel.

>>30465808
That's hideous. It's like Sonichu's clubfooted mutant babby.

>more sensible characters in the book of Ezekiel

kek

>>30465863
I wonder if I could get away with adapting the book of Ezekiel but changing his visions to Equestria.

>>30465764
>To be entirely fair, wherever you see the word "fandom" you may be sure that the word "autism" is nearby
Oh sure, but I still wouldn't say all of them are cut from the same cloth.

I think a large part of what makes the Sonic fandom so outstanding in the Special Olympics is that the autism has reached such a critical mass that it's extended far beyond the fandom itself. It's not something that's at the core, it's all over the place.
I've never really played or cared about Sonic, but I'm still aware of the vast amount of fandom shit around it. On the contrary there's somewhat popular things I do care about, do have some sort of fandom interest in (though usually minor), and I'd still be hard pressed to think of as much autistic bullshit as what surrounds Sonic.

I mean, just think of that whole "Google your name + The Hedgehog" thing.

The Star Trek fandom is huge, and I've purposefully sought out bad Trek stuff, it wouldn't be nearly enough to rival the shitty Sonic stuff I've seen accidentally.

But the relative size (at least online) of these fandoms make this hard to talk about. You could feasibly argue that every fandom has a number of autists, and that the bigger the fandom the more autistic it's going to seem. The fact that portraying the Sonic fandom as autistic has become "a thing" also inflates the perceived autism.
The entire franchise is a fucking joke, to the point where the Sonic PR-team is just memeing away.

>>30466280
Probably.

>>30465432
Oh wow, someone's a bit too touchy, don't you think?
What I mean is, you wrote out a full post about a shit idea you had, but only two bits are important - "supergenius, superaggressive, manipulative psychopaths" and "shows up in Equestria". That premise has been beaten to death, and none of those edgy crossover fics turned out to be good. But I'm sure your attempt #4377 will be the one that breaks the ice and becomes the next Past Sins.
Maybe this obscure writer you talk about is good and the Draka are not a fantasy of a goth teenager, but if that is so, you seriously failed in selling the idea.

>>30466296
Oh wow, someone's got poor reading comprehension and is salty about it.

Also,

>S.M. Stirling
>"obscure"

Have you ever read a book that didn't have a centerfold, Shitavious?

>>30466325
>haha u mad xd?

>>30466327
>get BTFO
>I know, I'll say "u mad bro?"
>and if that doesn't work I'll say he's "autistic!"
>that'll get him for sure!

wonka.jpg

>>30466336
Is this the point where we meme at each other and make up shit about how anything we disagreed with has been "BTFO"?

>>30466325
You asked for opinions, you got mine. Don't be so defensive.
And yes, obscure. I don't see any awards, his wikipedia page is laughably small, he's just a generic writer.
Then again, edgy war/gore HiE fics might give you some fans on fimfiction, especially since you're so intellectually enlightened.

>>30466296
Draka seems like complete shit:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Domination

http://web.archive.org/web/20010826224030/http://www.alternatehistory.com/gateway/analyses/Drakaproblems.html
Jump down to the Addendum bit below the timeline.

>>30466412
Damn, that is some good shit. There are probably Fall of Equestria stories better and more believable than what he's got going on.

>>30466479
>90% of the population are slaves
>specified rules for who can fuck slaves
>muh warmongering super soldier conquerors
>edgy as fuck
>"Genetically modified baboon shock troops"
Are we absolutely sure this isn't just the prequel to Fall of Equestria?

>>30466522
This reads like a HiE warfic as written by Shinzakura.

>>30466541
Speaking of...he's rewriting AAG chapter 25.

Without the baboons or something.

https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/747292/rescribble-under-way

>>30467214
wait. so shink took a step back and thought 'this idea is too stupid even for me' and commenced a rewrite?

>>30467588
Nah. Chances are he's just doubling down on stuff and elaborating on certain things.

But this isn't another 'remove the changelings curbstomping an entire US Carrier group' like last time, that would mean an entire fic rewrite.

Again.

>>30467588
>>30467661
yeah he's just concerned readers won't understand his genius

>>30467700
thats a legitimate concern, as most of his readers drool on themselves and eat paste

>>30465417
>Draka in Equestria
If it's a comedy, it could work, like the 40k "Krieg Death Korp in Equestria" one. There's always a lot of humor in juxtaposing the absurdity of grimdark with the lightheartedness of the show.

If you're shooting for some serious character and cultural drama, it'll probably be shit, since there'll be little difference between it and one of the countless edgy HiE fics where the human's a huge asshole who everyone eventually hates. At best, it'll drag on for a dozen chapters of back and forth before the Draka eventually adapt. At worst, you'll have her do something edgy like rape someone and the reader will eternally hate her and question why she's not been locked up or exiled.

>>30465764
>Does anyone now want to write "Autist in Equestria?"
Isn't that just the entire Anon in Equestria genre?

>>30469243
>Isn't that just the entire Anon in Equestria genre?
shares the same initialization, close enough for me

>>30429444
>but everything I can find for writing simply says "Just start writing! :^)"

If you're that shit at searching information from the web you didn't deserve any of the advice you received.

t. someone who has over 50 bookmarks, all filled with useful advice for various aspects of creative writing

If I enjoy sibling incest clop, will I also enjoy clopfics of a similar nature?

>>30470974
Sure.
Unless you like that just because it appeals to your particular fetish, then things get trickier.

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What would be a good name for a newspaper in Equestria?

I just need it for a throwaway line, and fuck me if I'm gonna use 'Equestria Daily'.

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>used to roleplay like hell on Habbo
>got an average of 90wpm because of that
>now curious about writing a pony story

Should I?

>>30471452
Canterlot Post
Las Pegasus Readers Journal
New Horseleans Times-Picayune
The failing Manehattan Times
Fillydelphia Inquirer
Equestria Today
Ponyville Gazette
Vanhoover Sun
Cloudsdale Tribune

All, of course, very fake, failing, they had to apolgize for the things they've said about me. Perpetrating the biggest witch hunt in political history

>>30471500
Do it, what's the worst that can happen?

>>30471452
Rarity mentioned that there is a 'Ponyville Express' in the 'Ponyville Confidential' episode.

>>30471500
Will bobba for furni.

>>30471577
But is there a Pony Express?

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>>30467588
>so shink took a step back and thought 'this idea is too stupid even for me'
Just the opposite, by the sound of it

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>>30472349
Seeing what made it into the chapter, I shudder at the thought of what had to be cut.

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So I just finished up the first chapter in an HiE, anybody here want to read it?

>>30472899
Or rather, pre-read it, I mean?

>>30470636
>thread devoted to discussion of fiction and creative writing
>how dare someone ask about creative writing
Your contribution here is appreciated.

>>30472899
Nobody here has enough willpower to tell you to fuck off nor to go "yeah sure whatever".

Well I'd suppose if anyone wants to read it and give me some feedback, go ahead.
Sorry if the pacing is a bit off, or it seems a bit pretentious, I havent been doing any writing for a few years

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rB6oXHi9lEfylODAj2IVnU5fWcUqpNYY4XMDzPcUJ6g/edit?usp=sharing

In other news, Andre's latest story stayed up for so short I didn't even catch it, because it got a 4:7 rating.
I can't believe this is the reason why I'll finally make myself a fimfic account.

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>>30473451
Well, I think it's quite alright. I haven't read much HiE and by that I mean, at all so I can't advise you regarding clichés of the genre or whatnot, but what you have is competently written, and it made give at least half a damn about what was going on.

Honestly, it's better than what I expected, so I don't think you'll have trouble finding an audience in FiMFiction.

I liked the slow pace, and the back and forth between Henry and the gryphon--whom I shall call Griffith, the egregious grieving gryphon, due to lack of a given name--was interesting. Perhaps it could be polished up to better build the tension to the summoning, but I think it works well enough for an introduction.

>>30473529
youre going to create an account just to kiss andres ass like that other faggot?

>>30473529
That boy ain't right.

>>30474869
I was trying to give him positive feedback so maybe he'd keep making more of his shit. I guess it kinda worked because he follows me now but idrk with someone like him. He's a special kind of fucked up.

>>30471452
Most newspaper names are names of towns with "Times" "News" "Chronicle" or some such added:
>Canterlot Post
>Baltimare Chronicle
>Vanhoover Gazette

Or you could go full pun
>Neigh Yoke Times

I'd recommend the latter.

>>30474869
>other faggot
Are you talking about New Spark (who just won't shut about how much he loves slurping Andre's semen), or that time I made an account pretending to be Andre's biggest fan just to he would put WaiWai back up?

>>30475072
new spark. i had forgotten about the waiwai antics

>>30474869
No, to like his stories and maybe leave a positive comment sometime. I'm not that desperate for new stories from him.

>read an interesting piece of fanfiction
>pretty damn good writing
>55% negative rating

Fuck some people on fimfiction driving away actual good writers just becausr they write about some weird fetish.

>>30475486
Post it.

>>30475495
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/343700/sunset-sandwich

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>>30475502
>mini-giant
so like a regular person, or...?

>>30475586
No, it's more like a mega-dwarf.

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>>30475606
Ahhhhh.

>>30475854
I love White Horse so fucking much.

>>30475486
>Fuck some people on fimfiction driving away actual good writers just becausr they write about some weird fetish.
These people are right. Write trash, go into the trash.

>>30475871
>good writers
are practically nonexistent in fanfiction

>>30476616
Good anything are rare, by definition.

>>30475251
You know what, if we could get enough people doing that I'm pretty sure he'd put up more stuff. He seems pretty easy to flatter.
Just like his stories, say something nice every now and then, and perhaps suggest some stupid bullshit.

>>30473451
Not bad. Still needs a proofreader though. There are a few places with awkward phrasing that you could fix.

The references to hockey players and napalm were a bit too modern IMO. Both were in the first gryphon section, I think. Also, in that same section, I'd recommend cutting the match + lantern bits and having him go straight for the fire. Otherwise I have to wonder why he needs magic for the fire, instead of just using matches + kindling like a normal person.

Getting the human to Equestria by having someone cast a summoning spell is a little cliche, but you put a bit of a unique spin on it by having the human come from the 1870s and the "someone" be a gryphon instead of Twilight. I just hope the rest of the fic doesn't proceed in the obvious direction, since "super-ambitious human and super-ambitions gryphon conquer Equus" sounds like a recipe for edge. I'd much rather read about these two learning to dial back their ambition a bit and make some friends.

>>30477575
Thank you for reading it. To be fair, I was a bit hesitant to include those references, but at the same time Equestria is a real smorgasbord of historical and cultural inventions, and it was more so for analogy sake than it was an actual reference.

And in terms of some of the comments you left on tense, the parts in present tense were more or less the characters' thoughts in the action, though I suppose I could signify that better.

As for the story, well I won't say the human will conquer Equus because thats a bit silly, he's only one guy.
My inspiration for the story was that a lot of HiE humans are troubled young people who've yet to find themselves or a purpose in life, and find said identity or purpose in Equestria and resolve whatever personal problems they have from their old life. My idea for the story was more so:
What if a person who already had a purpose in life got plopped in Equestria instead? The kind of person with a very set purpose and ambition having that taken from them and placed into a foreign land where everything and everyone they knew was gone?

So the story is more so to with the human having to come to terms with his eternally unfulfilled ambitions and unresolved personal problems

Also,
>the gryphon
>still alive at the end the chapter
Anon, I...

>>30477699
>that spoiler
Oh. Well, that makes the story far less interesting than I thought.

>>30477811
Well I suppose you are right.
Killing off a character I spent half the chapter building up seems a bit silly, edgy, and dickish. There's a lot better way I suppose I could handle it than Deus ex Magic Accident
If I were to keep him in for longer, but kill him off in a more appropriate and less bullshit way later on, would that be better, or is your interest more so in the gryphon and the human as a dynamic?

>>30477924
>is your interest more so in the gryphon and the human as a dynamic?
This. There's already a million and one stories where the human spawns in the Everfree and has to survive on his own for a while. I'm not too interested in one where the human spawns in the Frozen North and has to survive on his own for a while. The human starting out with an ally and something of a purpose would be a nice change of pace. I was looking forward to seeing the two of them try to take over the world together.

Post pony plots.

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If only Andre managed this level of awareness towards his own stories.

>>30479469
I feel I need context.

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>>30479485
He wrote a thing about Mass Effect: Andromeda.

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>check out andre's new story on fimfetch
>he didn't even reread the short synopsis
>the first two paragraphs of the synopsis is just the copy pasted openings from mass effect 1 and 2
Is this peak lazy. I'm almost kind of sad that it was deleted before it could be cached.

Also he's using the opening from ME2 you get if you don't save the council, yet he says that the canon for this story is that the council was saved. Does he not know how to read?

>"Fall of Starfleet, Rebirth of Friendship"
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/249531/fall-of-starfleet-rebirth-of-friendship
>A crossover using the world and characters of Mykan's my brave unicorn: Starfleet is magic. No need to worry about having to know the universe.

>"My name is Dark Conquest, although I much prefer the name given by the public, “Oh god, please stop.” A little long, but i like it,” Conquest chuckled as he walked closer towards the unicorn. “As for what I want, well...it’s my job to conquer worlds and universes that have proven themselves too weak to continue. Either they are too filled with hatred or fear to go on, or they are just plain rotten. Yours is one such world. Oh, the hate I feel from this place is exquisite! It’s a literal banquet here!”
>“Not this world!” Shouted Starla Shine. “Starfleet will stop you! STARFLEET magic!” she screamed as her body became engulfed in pink armor.

Why?

Wow I just noticed this: https://www.patreon.com/fimfiction

I guess at least knighty can drown his depression in some fancy Pinot Noir like lauren did

>>30480234
since its the twenty-first century and literally everyone uses adblock, hes got to attempt to pay for the site somehow. I'd just like to know whos dumb enough to give him their shekels

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>>30479499
>TFW you just started playing Andromeda, and every one of his points but 3 (which is dumb to begin with) is addressed by the game in the first hour or so.

>>30483173
to be fair, I dont think he actually played call of duty either. but that didnt stop him from writing a crossover fanfiction about it

>>30483173
It's Andre, what did you expect?

best VinylTavia fic? I have my own opinion but I want to hear some suggestions

>>30483445
I seem to remember Allegrezza being good, but that said it's been like five or six years since I read it, so I really have no idea.

>>30483445
I have fond memory of University Days, but I'm not sure how well it held up.

what story is there where I can say, "Fuck this, there all Koalas now"?

>>30484167
why would you ever want to do such a thing?

>>30484585
Because he's a "lol so randumb XD" brony 'author'.

>>30480491
That's easy, everyone who contributes has a little badge above their icon

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>The plants grow
>Animals care for themselves
>And the clouds move ... all on their own!
Hey I just realized why every HiE/PiE story has the Everfree as the gateway to Earth.
I'm just a liiiitle slow.

>>30485675
Hey maybe ambient magic is responsible for freezing things like how nature normally works, but for some reason it only affects non-sentient things.

I wonder what would happen if ponies visited a faraway land where everything is like on earth, and they broke everything just by being there.

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>>30485714
What if it freezes non-sentient things including stellar processes and orbits?

>>30485731
Hey wait that would actually explain things

>>30485714
Conversely, that could be the explanation as to why humans tend to be OP in HiE stories.

Something about Earth inhibits magic, which is why we're all normal.

Go to Equestria where we don't have those limitations, and we become superpowered. Kind of how Superman has super strength and superjumping/flight because Earth's gravity is a tiny fraction of the gravity on Krypton

>>30480491
>literally everyone wants to take away the sole source of income for many people online and thus receive less content

Bitch, I just avoid sites filled to the brim with shitty ads (e.g. many news websites). A couple of ads that make the page load 2 seconds slower don't bother me.

>>30486030
I have a profound hatred for ads, this shit is vile.
I'd much rather pay for good content.

What'd be a good name for a pony maid?

>>30487072
Featherduster
Squeaky Clean

and less cleverly:
Spick and Span (twins)
Spot Less

>>30487335
I like the first one. I'll stylise it to "Feather Duster" and make her a pegasus.
Thans, Anon.

If you were to build a cabinet out of preexisting ponies not necessarily Mane 6 but not necessarily not, who who be in what position?

The major cabinet positions follow:
>Secretary of State/Foreign Minister
>Secretary of the Treasury/Chancellor of the Exchequer
>Home Secretary/Secretary of Homeland Security
>War Secretary/Army Secretary
>Navy Secretary/First Lord of the Admiralty
>Attorney General

>>30488104
>>Secretary of State/Foreign Minister
Pinkie Pie. She can solve any international conflicts through parties.

>>Attorney General
Twilight. Give her a bunch of law books to memorise and she'll be set.

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>>30485743
>because Earth's gravity is a tiny fraction of the gravity on Krypton

What? No, that's wrong. Krypton has a red sun; it's because he's under our yellow sun that Superman has powers.

No, this is never fully explained.

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>>30488172
>Kryptonians, though otherwise completely human, were superior both intellectually and physically to natives of Earth (further, Krypton had much heavier gravity, making them all stronger as well, their muscles evolved/adapted to the greater resistance).
http://superman.wikia.com/wiki/Krypton

The radiation of the yellow sun is what gives him his other superpowers, like super-ventriloquism and super-weaving

>>30488206
>>30488172
That's the current reason, yes. But the other anon is correct in that during the golden age, for about 10 years or so after superman first came out, the canon explanation was just that krypton was a heavy gravity world and kryptonians were inherently superior.

Just that canon sucked, so it got canned.

>>30473451
Finaly got around to reading it. Left a few comments, but nothing major. Definitely a more interesting take on the HiE genre. As >>30477575
mentioned, there's a definite concern over the duo running roughshod over Equestria given who the protagonists are and their ambitions (I'm still confused over the hated for the Dutch, given the French should be blamed).

If you're going to go the takeover route, focusing on a takeover of Griffonstone would help worldbuild the griffons and not make it seem like two OCs are overpowering millenia old alicorns--plus it'd be far more believable they could take over the fallen Griffon Empire than the well established and powerful Equestria.

Then, later on, you can bring in geopolitics and potential realpolitik by both Equestria and the duo.

Killing the griffon character feels like a big mistake. Not only does it raise the "how can he narrate the events if he's dead?" first person question, it takes a really interesting character out of the game--with no real benefit to the story that I can see.

>>30485743
I've always found the "magically resistant" thing to be complete bullshit and only there to make sure the human characters can't get curbstomped immediately when they do edgy things.

If Equestria exists in the same universe Earth does, then it's governed by the same physics Earth is and the human character would be just as effected. If they don't, then the human character would be governed by the physics of that universe and not his own.

>>30488104
>Twilight as SoS
>Dash as Secretary of Defense/War
>Rarity as Secretary of Treasury
>Fluttershy as Secretary of the Interior or Navy is strictly limited to those six
>AJ as Secretary of Homeland Security
>Pinkie as Attorney General really, none of them fit very well as AG

>>30487439
>I'll stylise it to "Feather Duster" and make her a pegasus.
neva been done befo

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get hype

>>30490301
So much for leaving stuff out I suppose...

>>30490301
>book one

>>30491685
Judging by his output, book 2 should be done by 2038.

>>30492084
is book one going to be stopping at a proper ending point, or is it just getting some arbitrary end point because reasons?

>>30494799
I'm sure there'll be enough FAMILY DRAMA® to make the story implode upon itself, but leave enough cliffhangers and present a few twists to set up the second book.

>>30494799
Yes, it's a proper ending to the main warfic plot at least, in that the good guys have finally unfucked themselves and will maybe quit failing at literally everything. Also, both the major love triangles have been more-or-less resolved already: DJ and Mike stay together, Celestia is dating Sam, Pip is back with Imago, Star Swirl is banging Rumble, and Sweetie Belle is destined to die cold and alone. The one thing that comes to mind as completely unresolved is the subplot about Sunset Shimmer / Champaigne Dreams and the horse nazis. A lot of shit has happened in this fic, though, so I might be forgetting something.

So...
Y'all niggas reading any story lately?

>>30497639
I'm reading the Chrysalis Visits The Hague one on anon's recommendation, along with a bunch of one-shots as they come and go.
The Hague story is alright so far, but I'm only at the beginning.

>>30497639
/tg/ stuff.

Someone recommended me a pone one-shot and I'll read it.

>>30422733
final solution will never get an ending. fimfiction general lied to me.

>>30497959
is that some sort of hitler in equestria story you were enjoying?

Can anyone recommend some really cozy, wholesome stories to me? I'm looking for fics that make me feel like a lot of The Descendant's stuff did. Any genre or length is fine.

I try to find this stuff myself, but I always end up with either shortfics where nothing actually happens, or longfics that are full of padding and filler. I'm more interested in something has a... a sense of morality? I don't know exactly what the right word is, but stories that aren't about nothing, but still leave you feeling warm and fuzzy after you read them. Recommendations would be much appreciated.

>>30497768
Same. It's decent but a little slow and not very well edited.

>>30497959
But anon, the author's not dead! Look, it says so on his blog!

>tfw I check for a new chapter on the 16th of every month like clockwork
>tfw I keep doing this even though there's been nothing the past 8 times

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>>30500414
Forgot the pic

>>30500416
so hes too busy trying to fuck horses to write about horses.

Hes not the only one Ive seen making posts about horses. im slightly jeebied about people who write creepy shit about horses owning horses

>>30422733
Why the ennui, thread? Feeling unfulfilled in your daily life?

>>30497639
I read "A Graceful Submission" a few days ago.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/29570/a-graceful-submission

It's pretty good. It's nice to read something from the earlier times of the fandom, when headcanons weren't as established as they are nowadays.

The Trixie/AJ romance is decently built up, and it gets you invested in their bonding up until they get down to business.

All in all, it's no masterpiece, but it's quite an interesting and enjoyable read.

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>>30501240
Thanks for reminding me, asshole.
; _ ;

Hey, look.
Someone updated.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/45860/diaries-of-a-madman

>>30501546
Everyone enjoys something. It's up to you to find it. Humans are, as a species, born to fail. This is our one right in the cosmos. It's your job to overcome it.

Life is branches on a tree. If one branch doesn't work, look at the other ones.

Always try to move forward. Even if it's one inch at a time, you need to keep going.

Are you a vidya nerd? Start a twitch channel. Are you unfulfilled sitting at home, research hiking trails near you. Are you feeling weak? Join a gym and wreck bitches with your soon to be muscles.

I'll say it again, humans are doomed to fail. It's your job to overcome that and figure out your place among the 7 billion other people here.

>>30501697
>Whatmustido
Wake me up once he updates Satellite Lovers

>>30502331
at least hes just focusing on one thing and we dont have to worry about DoaM sidestories or spinoffs

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Have you written anything lately? Surely you must have some stories in mind.

>>30504064
I wrote something about Salisbury, wanna read it?

>>30504620
The steak or the city?
Either way, sure.

>>30504620
like the steak?

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>no updates since 2014
>featured in the box in one of the alloted spaces for updated works
Say what?

>>30504677
>>30504678
Orchestral music played inside a church that was situated in the middle of nowhere. There was a open plane of grass that spanned for miles around the church and it seemed no pony was anywhere outside. There was only one pony of considerable note, her name was Twilight Sparkle and she sat in one of the seats situated inside. The light from the lamps above the room lit the room with an even dimness compared to the pitch black darkness outside. Twilight stood motionless as if she was stone, she couldn't even get up.
"Where am I? What's going on, Spike?" she said.
She looked to the source of music, it's loud, yet solemn melody gave a shock in her hooves. There was no pony there playing, the strum of the chords hitting on their own. Then, the church doors far behind her screeched open, a figure that was not seeable could be heard walking forward. The hoof steps it made were loud enough to resound in the church, and Twilight tried with all her strength to move her body. A weakness had caused her hooves to feel heavy as a ton of bricks against the wooden seat.
Then, Twilight heard someone speak into her ear. So close to her that she could feel it's breath on her skin.
"Salisbury..."

>>30504779
Suddenly, Twilight Sparkle stirred and rose from her bed, a miasma of numbness hit her mind. She got out of the bed and went rushing down the stairs after smelling the scent of sweet meat. She turned on the light switch on the wall with a simple flick. She found Spike, pounds of cow meat seared to perfection all over the floor in droves. He took a bucket filled with grease and dropped the sticky substance all over him.
"Spike! What are you doing!? Is it because of the dream I had? What is going on!?"
Spike the Dragon looked at Twilight and frowned before he started forming tears down his face. He felt so helpless, and he could not control the vibe to drop oodles of steak juice onto himself. Suddenly, Twilight came forth towards Spike, and moaned a low shriek. The smell of steak sauce was overwhelming her senses, she blushed at the sight of Spike completely covered.
"I can't help myself Twilight, I... can't control it!"
Twilight got close to Spike and submerged her face into his warm sauce covered body. She stuck out her tongue and licked him up and down his body.

that's about if for now

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>>30504714
Apparently this was written alongside the first story, but not published because some rule about not being allowed to publish the same story with only minor alterations. That rule seems to have been discarded, so it's ok to publish it.

>>30504779
>>30504787
1. The intro was nice, it had a bit of atmosphere.
2. Fuck you.
3. I know the show skirts this issue by making dragons eat gems, but it would be cool to see a fic tackle the issue of dragons being carnivores. Spike is growing, so his body will start to crave more protein.

>>30504861
>Spike is growing, so his body will start to crave more protein.
well being that its spike, he'll likely obtain that protein by sucking off every male in the country

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>>30504876
I'd read it.

>>30504064
Back in, dear me, February, I started writing a story comprised of written reports--interview transcripts, news reports, ER files, etc.--and now I'm back at it. I've written a few more and will try to get it published before the month is over.

>>30504850
Oh, that makes sense. I've always wondered why that story was unlisted, and you could only find it with a link.