JoJo Thread #13: German Science Edition

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>>29781969
In order to facilitate the creation of new stands and easy bumps here's a handy stand generator;
http://www.pages.drexel.edu/~dft29/Stand_Generator/Stand-Generation-Overdrive.html

And if you want to go the extra mile, replace the ability you get in ｢Description｣ and write your own description of how your Stand looks and works, along side the song or artist you're referencing in your Stand. That'd be sweet.

Stand Proud!

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>>29782004
Finally, whether your new to the thread or have been here since the start and want an outlet for your creativity without undertaking a massive story, why not try your hand at an All Star Battle?

Many stands have been thought of or generated in these threads, so why not have them face against each other and see who comes up on top?
>Pick any stands from these threads and come up with a battle!
>Example: [BENZIN] vs. [Rocket Man]
>And if you're feeling really creative, you could write multipe stand users fighting, either in groups or be a huge battle royal.
>Example: The ｢SHADOWBOLTS｣ vs The ｢WONDERCOLTS｣
>And in true Jojo fashion, feel free to get creative with it. Maybe write a conflict that isn't a straight up battle.
>Example: Rainbow Dash decides to prank Pinkie Pie with her newly gained stand, unbeknowenst to the fact that Pinkie also possesses one, and shenanigans ensure.

We've had many ASB's.
The battle of the greens: http://pastebin.com/nYizqLre (embed)
Or the Triple Pink Ponkdown! http://pastebin.com/0GKTJbDC (embed)
We've seen team-ups against powerful foes http://pastebin.com/AUjwjBcF (embed)

But we still ask ourselves... do we stand a chance against the Jojo protagonists?

>ASB: Jonathan vs. Fire in the Church http://pastebin.com/si7M9A9f

>ASB:Giorno Giovanna VS Erich Rammstein
http://pastebin.com/Atks9007

New to the thread and don't know what to read?
Here's a short listing:

>Rammstein's Bizarre Adventure: (Ace_Sorou)
Erich Rammstein is a NatSoc and stand user living in Canterlot that gets often dragged to battles against other stand users.And his sister is a cute. A CUTE!
Status: ONGOING
All chapters here: http://pastebin.com/u/Ace_Sorou

>Dimensional Link: (A-non moose)
Pinkie Pie stabs Anon with the Stand Arrow, thus granting him a stand. And everything is fine and dandy, until said arrow becomes Twilight's stand. Now Anon and his pony friends need to find a way to create a new arrow and give it back to Pinkie's family because tradition... or is that all?
Status: ONGOING
All chapters here: http://pastebin.com/u/A-nonMoose

>Stan(d)on in Equestria:(AusAnon)
Rainbow Dash misteriously develops the stand of ｢ANONYMOUS｣, which has its own will, and quickly become friends. But when the ｢NIGHTMARE｣ returns to Equestria, it is up to them to fight it and any other stand user that gets in their way.
Status: ONGOING
All chapters here: http://pastebin.com/u/AusAnon

>MY LITTLE JOJO: STANDS ARE MAGIC: (Cameo)
After Twilight and Starlight prod Anon's soul in an attempt to give him magic, his "Soul Stone" shatters everywhere, granting anypony in contact with it a stand. Anon also develops a stand, but a new threat comes to Equestria, trying to get a hold of the soul shards and get rid of Anon and his friends in the process...
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/u/Creamymemedaddy

>>29782143
>Care Root's Bizarre Adventure: (Ditherer)
When Stands become normal in CHS, the antisocial loser Care Root gets one that burns up his own future with every use. After a chance encounter with his soulmate, that future suddenly changes, making him one of the most dangerous Stand users in play. Will he survive the conspiracies and shadow-wars raging across Canterlot when even victory can burn up his reason for fighting?
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/u/Ditherer

>Coco's Bizarre Adventure: Nothing's Kingdom (Ditherer)
On the night King Sombra reconquers Equestria and sends the Elements into comas, Coco Pommel falls off her balcony, sorts out her life, and gets saved by a mysterious power before she hits the ground. With the power of Stand, she ventures beyond Manehattan to foil Sombra's plans, save civilization, and - most importantly - revive Rarity.
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/u/Ditherer or http://www.fimfiction.net/story/328442/cocos-bizarre-adventure-nothings-kingdom

>French Anon's Bizarre Adventure: (FrenchAnon)
Anon is an intern in the SpeedWagon Foundation, but after a terrorist attack during an experiment with a stand arrow, he is transported to Canterlot High...
Status: This story has not been updated in a long while...
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/Bun2pUFy

>Anon's Bizarre Adventure: Canterlot Escapade: (FriskyBits)
Anon and Pinkie Pie get stabbed with an arrow and develop stands of their own. After meeting with other stand users, they decide to investigate who is responsible of going around town giving powers to random people.
Status: This story has not been updated in a while.
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/QivjKsiH

>>29782169
>Stand by Me: (FuckFaceMcGee)
Anon Y. Mous, your slacker green weeb, becomes really close with his purple neighbour Twilight Sparkle. After watching Jojo toghether, Twilight develops an "Evoker", which is capable of granting a stand to whomever is shot by it. Flash Sentry, in a fit of jealousy, steals the Evoker and starts creating an army of stand users to get in the way of Twilight and Anon's relationship.
The OG story!
Status: The author is on a hiatus.
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/515d4KLQ

>Anon's Stando Adventure: (Omnee)
Anon gets invited by Celestia to check the "Sovereign Arrow", an ancient relic said to grant powers to whomever survives being stabbed by it. After messing with it, Anon is able of weilding the power of stand, but apparently a shady group is coming for his life. And either by bad luck or destiny, his friends get stabed with the arrow and get stands of their own.
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/u/Omnee_Potent

>Kira Visits Horseland: I Want It All (Omnee)
Yoshikage Kira, after the events of Part 4, awakens in Equestria with a downgraded version of his stand. Now, under a false identity, he plans to get back his powers and his quiet life.
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/u/Omnee_Potent

>Friendship's Bizarre Adventure Part one! The Dark Side of the Moon (Phase 2)
Jovial Journey, a.k.a. Jojo, is a talented psychiatrist in Equestria assigned to council Princess Luna. But after she becomes Nightmare Moon, it is up to Jojo, Celestia and other ponies to stop her from resurrecting Discord.
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/DNZ6FD9q

>Daring Do and the Arrows of Marapore.feat Ziggy (StarAnon)
Mild-mannered Ziggy Stardust is sent to negotiate with A.K. Yearling on behalf of her publisher, only to become embroiled in a Daring Do adventure featuring some especially magical arrows.
Status: Complete
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/9fSMNBDh

>>29782179
>Interview with a Stand User (StarAnon)
Featherweight is a sick child staying in Canterlot's Hospital.His condition gets worse quickly and so does his hopes of living, until one day his mother brings a quirky character to visit him.
Set after the events in "Daring Do and the Arrows of Marapore"
Status: Complete
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/dqnGFj3m

>Cat Armed Phenomena (StarAnon)
Flitter and Cloudchaser, the Stand-wielding Storm Sisters, find their occupational luck changing when they get a job tracking down a very special missing cat. Unfortunately, they're not the only Stand users trying to get their hands on "Princess Blue"...
Set before the events in "Daring Do and the Arrows of Marapore"
Status: Complete
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/WP4W1KNm

>JoJo Green? It might be a thing: (Superkeaton)
Anon, a self proclaimed PSIE-ntist, wants to uncover the misteries of Canterlot City, but he may be in more than he can handle.
The story is supposed to feature the stand [Beautiful Liar].
Status: This story has not been updated in a long while...
All chapters: http://pastebin.com/jLVdFdQV

>JoJo's bizarre adventure part 9: Cars & Chaos... and JoeJoe: (Writroplex)
JoeJoe is a student in Canterlot High that doesn't get along with anyone else, but after discovering he is part of the Joestar linage, bizarre events may happen.
Status: This story has not been updated in a while.

>Shizuka Joestar in Canterlot High (not the official title): (FightingPen)
Anon, a normal student in Canterlot High, is tasked to show the new student around the school. But not long after meeting Shizuka, he gets involved in a stand battle...
Status: ONGOING
All chapters: Please provide a pastebin.

>>29781969
>>29782123
We made a new thread with the same image at the same time, what are the odds?

Anyway, final update before I post my ASB: I'm not the biggest fan of it because I feel like I tried to finagle things into place too much, but I'm gonna put the finishing touches on it and try to polish it up and hopefully you guys will like it.

See you all soon.

>>29782202
> what are the odds?

After /mlpol/ anything's possible.

Maybe if we're lucky Ace will return and grace us with another Rammstein's Bizarre Adventure.

>>29781969
>>>/mlpol/

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>>29781969
Oh, we are back.
Yesterday sure was a funky day.
It kinda was like if two different universes crossed over.
Not that we would know much about that topic, right guys?
>>29782202
>>29782280
I was saving that image for another thread too. Guess we are all on the same wavelenght.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MkZuNGZOgjA

To answer the question in the last thread, dice rolled in ｢Offspring｣ rocket from the field like fireworks and land somewhere else.

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What is more fun to read?:
>A stand user fighting against someone who can counter its ability.
>Stand users with similar abilities fighting against each other.

>>29782280

Hey all.

Yeah, I kinda left 4chan for a while. And if I knew about the merger yesterday, I would've been there, possibly revealing my power level. (Hint: it's 1488.) But I digress.

A lot of drama happened in my life, and I was burned out on writing. Honestly, the current chapter had no plan, and no bearing on the overall story I was writing. I think I said it before, but it's pretty much unnecessary filler. But people seemed to like it, so I kept writing, despite me wanting to go back to the original story.

That being said, I have no intention on abandoning this story, or the current chapter. I actually wanna thank you all for keeping faith in me, instead of labeling my story "abandoned" you decided to keep it as "ongoing." I can't tell you how happy that makes me.

Having had a considerable break from writing, I decided that I'm going to come back refreshed, and finish what I started. Thank you all for remaining loyal fans, and I can't wait to post my new material.

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>>29784335
Ace is coming back!?
All right! I knew something good may come from yesterday's merger.

>>29784335
>Ace's return to writefagging is our karmic reward for enduring the loss of the thread during the /mlpol/ merger

Truly we are blessed.

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>>29781969
>mfw I never updated the JoeJoe arc leading up to the trashing of Aryannes car
>mfw I have to re-write it from scratch
>inb4 "why didn't you do it there and then"

I didn't know gook moot was going to merge two fucking boards for April fools day and was going to wait for the thread to archive...

>>29785610
It's all good senpai, we're just waiting on the good green.

STAND NAME: [BUMP]
STAND MASTER: ANONYMOUS

ABILITY: Allows the user to keep a thread from falling off the board.

>>29784335
>>29785610
>Ace and Writroplex are coming back.
>Omnee is gonna post his ASBs.
Is 13 our lucky number, or are we gonna have to face DEATH 13?

>>29787526
Just fixing things up. This is going up within an hour whether I'm satisfied with it or not. Be patient with me for just a little longer folks.

Here we go boys, at long fuckin' last.

>What?
>Didn’t you pass out in your bed after that crap with Toccata and Fugue?
>Why are you standing on the side of a building?
>Furthermore, why is that building suspended off a wall that stretches down forever?
>Where the fuck are y-
>Oh
>Oh shit
>This is the last stretch of time before everything gets reset
>Before it all goes to hell and everyone gets reborn as horse racers
>You’re standing on the side of a storage building in Cape Canaveral
>Which means that Gay Priest has already evolved his Stand once, which means that he’s about to go full Sanic in a way that the universe cannot handle
>If you don’t find a way back to Equestria soon, you’re fucked
>But if you’re remembering right, BoiPucci should be obtaining [Made In Heaven] right about-
>”[MAIDO IN HEBUN]!”
>The birth of a godless abomination floods the world with an unholy light as Enrico Pucci’s voice echoes throughout the Kennedy Space Center
>Everything slowly begins to tilt backwards towards the ground, and you’re forced to scramble up the wall to avoid falling flat onto the pavement that is now beneath you
>Well the good news is that you no longer have to worry about falling off the face of the planet
>The bad news is that the universe is about to be reset
>The other good news is that you know where Pucci is, so it’s about time you get over there
>Only problem is, you’re way too fucking slow
>…Could you launch yourself at a shallow angle with [Saturn’s Children] and then use it to catch yourself before going splat on the ground?
>Worth a shot, but if you fuck up there’s no way you’re getting home before the reset
>Better run some simple calculations, set the vector and who the fuck are you fooling, just pick an angle and a speed and LAUNCH
>[Saturn’s Children] rockets you into the sky, narrowly avoiding clipping your chin on nearby roofs while you zip towards the end of the universe

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>>29787880
>You bring your Stand back down in front of you, reversing the direction of its rotation to reduce your flight speed, and just in time
>As your feet make contact with the ground Gay Priest appears in front of you with his brand-new Stand, which in your opinion looks like someone took a gay bleached midget and slapped a horse’s head on his dick
>”Glad to see you have come, Mr. Mous. I expect you’re here to witness the end of the world? The birth of a universe free of the Joestar clan? One where my lord Dio will rule above all others?”
>”Not gonna happen! I’m here to rescue my dad!”
>Jolyne Cujoh swings in out of nowhere and tries to plant her boots onto Pucci’s face
>He dodges so quickly that the air he displaces knocks you both backwards, and he vanishes completely from sight
>As you and Jolyne stand up and dust yourselves off, Gay Priest reappears with his hands gently wrapped around Jotaro Kujo’s neck
>Two silver discs, one emblazoned with the word “MEMORY” and the other bearing Star Platinum’s image, are sticking out of Jotaro’s head
>Jotaro isn’t moving
>This is not how things are supposed to go
>How’d he even know who you are?
>”Now Jolyne, I’d be more than willing to part with your braindead father, but I need something from you in exchange. Fight this nice young man to the death, or I’ll kill your remaining friends and your father one by one, understand? Nothing must stand in the way of Lord Dio’s new universe.”
>Pucci’s hands tighten around Jotaro’s neck
>Jolyne’s hands clench at her sides
>Your hands pull at the neck of your shirt
>She’s ruthless, but you don’t think she’d be able to kill a semi-innocent bystander she just met
>You glare at Pucci, trying to figure out a way to defeat [Made In Heaven]-
>”I’m sorry you got involved in all this, but I need to save my father.”
>ゴゴゴゴゴゴ
>There’s only the slightest hint of remorse in her voice
>Fuck

>>29787890
“The Swift-Sleuthing Gravity Master” VS. “The Lean Mean Bondage Queen”

OPEN THE GAME!

>Prehensile string wraps tightly around your legs and rips them out from under you, slamming you into the ground and dragging you towards Jolyne
>”[STONE FREE]!”
>Massive amounts of silken string spool up from Jolyne’s shoulders, bunching into a vaguely humanoid shape, a very buff humanoid shape
>You had really hoped she wouldn’t use her Stand to ORAORAORA the shit out of you, but fear for one’s family tends to cloud one’s judgement
>”I’ll end this in one blow! ORA!”
“[SATURN’S CHILDREN]!”
>Your Stand flies up directly in the path of [Stone Free]’s fist, spinning as rapidly and orbiting as tightly as it can to repel Jolyne’s attack
>The gravitational force is so intense that [Stone Free]’s hand bounces off and to the side, nearly breaking Jolyne’s wrist
>Swinging [Saturn’s Children] down below your feet, you narrow it tightly around the bunched up string and push as hard as you can away from yourself
>Jolyne grits her teeth as she tries her best to hold on, but your Stand proves to be too strong to resist and she unravels her strings from your legs
>”AHH! That really hurt you shithead! It’s like grabbing someone’s cheek and stretching it as far as it can go, and when they tell you to stop you just keep doin’ it!”
“That’s what you get for being an asshole!”
>During the lull in fighting, you rapidly glance around for anything you could launch through [Saturn’s Children] with the force of a bullet
>A brick, a rock, even just a penny is fine
>You just need to put some space between the two of you
>There! A pebble!
>You quickly dash away from Jolyne and stoop to grab the tiny stone, then turn to address her
“Hey, we don’t need to fight! Listen to me, we have to stop or we’re both gonna die!”
>Her only response is to continue stalking towards you, glaring into your soul with murderous intent
>Shit, she’s not listening! You’re gonna have to try something else.

>>29787894
>You begin tightening [Saturn’s Children]’s orbit and speeding up its rotation
>Your Stand floats up to chest height and points itself at your opponent, who seems to just be analyzing you
>Oh shit, you’ve already given her time to get a closer look at how you fight!
>She’s gonna pick up on your ability really quickly!
>Fuck it, FIRE!
>Using your thumb, you flick the pebble into [Saturn’s Children]’s orbit, and it rockets out towards Jolyne’s shoulder
>Instead of blocking with her Stand or dodging, she deliberately takes it and doesn’t even flinch
>As she begins stalking towards you, she unravels a bit of string from the impact site, revealing that the pebble harmlessly impacted some bunched-up string instead of her flesh, and it drops to the asphalt
>”A Stand that alters speed, huh? Might be dangerous if you knew how to use it, but you clearly don’t, or you wouldn’t have stood there like a retard and let me watch it in action.”
>Shit, you hate being right sometimes
>Well, the good news is that she doesn’t fully get it, so you’ll have to use her half-knowledge of your powers to your advantage
>Spying a few more loose rocks, you hurry around the battlefield and scoop them up, firing them through your Stand as she stalks towards you and increasing the rotation every time
>The last stone you fire actually causes her to stagger back from the sheer momentum of it, and that’s when you press the advantage
>Launching [Saturn’s Children] away from your body, you push it onto [Stone Free], forcing both it and Jolyne into a nearby wall
>She’s held there by the force of your Stand, and can’t so much as move
“Jolyne! We need to stop fighting! If we work together, I’m sure we can defeat Pucci and save your dad! We just need to-“
>A sudden blast of air throws you off balance and breaks your concentration, allowing Jolyne to fall away from the concrete
>Pucci has appeared before you once more, holding Jotaro’s memory disc in his hands
>He begins to bend it
>FUCK

>>29787899
>”STOP THAT YOU FUCKIN’ BASTARD!”
>”Allow me to add one stipulation to this battle: if one of you does not kill the other then I will break Jotaro’s memory disc in two, and he shall remain braindead for the rest of his short life. Understand? One of you must die in order for Jotaro Kujo to be saved.”
>Pucci teleports away again, and Jolyne clenches her fists so hard her nails break skin
>As the blood flows from her palms she brings her gaze back up to your eyes, and you can see the terrifying resolve therein
>Only one of you is walking away from here alive

>Jolyne just stands there
>Menacingly
>Then she stoops down almost casually, and picks up a handful of pebbles
>”Two can play at this game.”
>[Stone Free] appears behind Jolyne again, balling its hand into a fist and balancing the rock on its thumb
>It flicks its thumb out at a meteoric pace, launching the tiny stone towards you at high velocity
>Without even thinking, [Saturn’s Children] shoots out in front of you, spinning rapidly to halt the projectile in its path
>By the time it’s caught the first pebble, Jolyne’s already fired a second one
>This one flies wide, and it takes a second for you to see the minuscule string trailing behind it
>By that time it’s already too late
>The string catches on one of the many girders dotted around the area, which slingshots it back around and directly into your right calf
>The stone penetrates the first few layers of skin and lodges in, drawing blood and forcing you to put all of your weight on your left leg to avoid agitating the wound
>That’s when you see Jolyne tug on her end of the string
>It pulls taut around the girder and yanks the rock out of your leg, causing blood to splatter onto the ground and making you take a knee
>Angry with yourself for being so careless, you seize the end of the string close to you and spin up [Saturn’s Children] around it, stretching the fibers out
>Jolyne grits her teeth in response

>>29787904
>”If I’ve told you once, I’ve told you a thousand times: stop stretchin’ out my string, asshole!”
“You’re fighting with the intention of killing me; I’m not going to listen to a word you say.”
>”Fine!”
>Jolyne shoots another stone at you while your Stand is preoccupied and it catches you in the stomach, knocking the wind out of you
>CHANCE!
>HHA ACTIVATED: THE OL’ QUARTER ON A STRING TRICK
>The rest of the handful of pebbles she picked up are quickly shrouded in string and thrown at you en masse
>Each has a different arc and velocity and you instinctively know you won’t be able to deflect them all
>As your Stand spins up in front of you again, several stones wrap around the pillars of the Center and slam into your backside, then quickly retract into [Stone Free]’s waiting hands
>It didn’t cause any more flesh wounds, but you’re now covered in aches and pains where the rocks made contact with you and it makes it difficult to focus
>While you have a moment you widen [Saturn’s Children]’s orbit, hopefully preventing any further attacks of that nature
>Jolyne launches the second volley much faster than you expected, and a couple of the rocks actually break through your Stand’s gravitational field, blasting into your left arm and right thigh
>They pierce just deep enough to cut you, and hit just hard enough to cause major aches
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!”
>DAMN, IT HURTS
>You grab the twin strings as they attempt to pull away from your body, pushing them back with your Stand and freeing the rocks they hold as Jolyne struggles against the stretching of her fabric
>The strings actually tear this time, and as they retract into Jolyne’s body you can see that she is now missing the index and thumb nails on her right hand
>”YOU LITTLE SHIT!”
>Acting quickly, you narrow [Saturn’s Children] as tightly as you can and flick one pebble through it, directly towards Jolyne’s brain

>>29787912
>Even if she unravels there’s still a chance it could cause blunt trauma to her head if it hits hard enough
>Just as you expected, she takes the bait, unraveling some of the string that makes up her head and taking the hit like a champ
>Not a moment later she staggers a little
>Apparently the shock was enough to give her a slight concussion
>You ready the second stone and take aim at her head again
>FIRE
>”[STONE FREE]!”
>Her Stand barely raises its arms in time to block your shot, but the tiny projectile pierces through [Stone Free]’s armguard at high velocity, causing an identical wound on Jolyne and eliciting a massive spurt of blood from her forearm
>”AAAAAAAH SHIT! I’M GONNA KICK YOUR ASS FOR REAL NOW!”
>Time to bounce
>You fire yourself through [Saturn’s Children] as Jolyne’s string swipes through the air where you stood a second ago
>As you rotate your head mid-flight to track her, she forms a rope that latches on to the nearest roof, pulling her up after you as she retracts it at high speeds
>”GET BACK HERE! I NEED TO SAVE MY DAD!”
“AND I NEED TO NOT DIE!”
>”NOT GONNA HAPPEN!”
>Using her string, she latches onto a pillar and yanks herself downward, directly toward your landing zone
>Aw shit
>Using a nearby roof to halt her fall, Jolyne spreads her Stand all over the area, smirking up at you as you plummet towards your end
>Not today, bitch
>[Saturn’s Children] encircles your waist, again spinning at high speed to halt your fall
>Jolyne scowls, and begins shuffling her strings around
>You’re directly above a tiled roof, so you drop down onto it, collapsing to one knee with exhaustion
>Flying around with your Stand is going to completely tire you out if you keep doing it
>If it hasn’t already, anyway
>In the distance, just above the wreckage of a shuttle, you can see Gay Priest hovering, observing the battle

>>29787917
>[Saturn’s Children] spins in an agitated fashion next to you as you try to figure out what Pucci will do to you if the battle doesn’t kill you first
>Jolyne’s sudden reentry into the fray prevents you from following that train of thought
>Bitch slingshots herself right past your face, does a perfect flip in midair, and spreads [Stone Free]’s string over the entire roof in the form of a tightly-woven net
>Right before it comes down over your head, you jump through your Stand again, launching yourself over the edge
>Oh balls, this is gonna hurt
>You squeeze your eyes shut and grit your teeth, tensing your body against the inevitable crunch of bone on concrete
>It never comes
>Jolyne looks over the gutter above you, grim triumph etched into her face
>A single string twists its way around your ankle, keeping you from fleeing any farther, but also keeping you from killing yourself in a moment of haste
>However, your own momentum is carrying you towards the building at a frightfully high velocity
>Fortunately, it’s only an overhang supported by pillars, and the rear wall is just far back enough that you don’t hit it on the upswing
>Unfortunately, [Stone Free] has a very tight grip on your ankle and your opponent is well and truly pissed, so you don’t think your trick from earlier will work out again, and Jolyne will probably reel you in and kick your ass after a few more back-and-forth swings
>Conveniently, there’s a window directly across from you
>Time to stop starting sentences with adverbs and GET THE FUCK IN THERE
>[Saturn’s Children] flies out into the path of your swing, whirling in front of the glass as you cover your head with your forearms
>As you rocket through it, the world goes hazy and a million trucks hit you all at once and then you’re spiraling through, a thousand shards of glass tinkling around you like lethal raindrops

>>29787927
>The impact with the floor jars your left shoulder, and you find it difficult to put weight on your left arm when you try to get up
>A tug on your ankle informs you that [Stone Free] still has a grip on you, and you scramble around for a piece of glass, nicking your arms in the process
>There!
>A nice elongated sliver glimmers next to your foot
>Cautiously, you reach down and grab it, when suddenly Jolyne’s string stretches taut through the broken window
>”You’re not gonna escape that way you bastard!”
>She’s just a hair too late
>You quickly slash across the string binding your foot, watching it fray as you frantically cut through the fibers
>A sanguine solution spurts from the severed silk, and Jolyne screeches in the distance
>The loop around your ankle begins dissolving, and the acrid scent of burning skin fills the room as [Stone Free]’s severed string flakes away into nothingness
>At a snail’s pace, you push yourself off the ground, careful not to agitate your wounds, and manage to finagle your body into a sitting position
>Your shirt becomes strips to apply to all the little cuts you’ve acquired, and you work fast as you dab up the blood that runs down your arms
>When you think you’re all ready to go, you stand up, discarding the bloodied scraps that your clothing has become
>As you slowly straighten, a sensation of wooziness overcomes you, and you nearly fall back down
>Shit, that’s probably a sign that you’ve lost a lot of blood
>If this is going to end, it’s got to end soon
>Time to assess the situation
>It looks like you landed in an office, and there’s a nice wastebasket nearby for you to throw the scraps of your shirt into
>Actually, you could probably just pick up a bunch of this glass and carry it around in that thing; it’d be perfect to fire at Jolyne with [Saturn’s Children], and all you’d need to do is shake the basket so the glass flies out of it

>>29787935
>As quickly as is possible, you crouch down and begin filling the trash can with whatever shards of window you can pick up without cutting your fingers
>After a minute, there’s a good amount of large pieces of glass sitting in your makeshift ammo can
“I just hope this works.”
>Heh, it just works
>You limp out of the office with your new toys, using [Saturn’s Children] to yank the hinges off of the locked doors in your way

>After an eternity of three minutes, you finish limping into the sunlight, wincing every time you set your right leg down
“Should’ve just held her net back with [Saturn’s Children] instead of hurting myself like a dumbass.”
>Whatever, you’re still alive
>Looking around, you notice several strings on the concrete next to you, twitching slightly
>Probably part of [Stone Free]; Jolyne must be searching for you
>She could hear with them in the manga, couldn’t she?
>Leaning down, but not close enough to get grabbed, you speak to the strings
“Yo Jolyne, I’m right here. Let’s get this over with.”
>You stamp your good foot several times by the strings for good measure, causing them to twitch more erratically before retracting around the corner
>That should bring her out of hiding very soon
>She probably wants to finish this just as quickly as you do

>After a few minutes of waiting slouched over on the ground, Jolyne stalks out from around the corner in front of you
>”You ready to finish this, asshole?”
>She seems conflicted, like she’s trying to figure out whether or not to side with you
“Seems like you’re hesitating, have you decided to think twice about killing me?”
>Jolyne slouches, her face downcast and her body language defeated
>You don’t fall for it, backing up to the office behind you and keeping your back to the wall
>She sneers
>”I’ll do what I have to. Saving my dad and stopping Pucci are more important than wasting time on this battle.”

>>29787946
>Never in your life did you think she’d be so ruthless, but that also means that you have to take her down before she gets a chance to kill you.
>You were hoping to avoid this, but it’s time to make your final move
“Fine then. Let me just ask you one last thing.”
>She stares you down with a glare that could kill the sun, and growls out her response
>”What.”
>Pausing for dramatic effect, you look her straight in the eyes
>ゴゴゴゴゴゴ
“Do you believe in the power of ｢Gravity｣?
>GHA ACTIVATED: GLASSY COMPLEXION
>High above the court you both stand in, [Saturn’s Children] inverts its orbit, and rains down hell at an angle
>Shards of glass blast into every part of Jolyne’s extremities, and as her legs, arms, and scalp are sliced apart she falls backwards, inviting the deadly deluge into her torso and face
>You hated to do it, you really did, but you didn’t want to die and she was never going to stop trying to save Jotaro
>As you watch, her body starts to unravel itself, living string writhing against the rough ground, but she can find nowhere to slither that won’t destroy her even further
>Before [Stone Free] can unravel her head though, a particularly nasty piece of glass pierces straight through her skull, lobotomizing her instantly
>You jerk away from the sight, breathing laboriously
>You just killed another human being
>Your lunch threatens to come back up, bile rising in the back of your throat
>This is way harder to deal with than you expected.
>Jolyne Cujoh’s death signals your freedom, and Pucci appears before you once again, cackling over his victory
>”Haha! Thanks to you my dear boy the new universe shall be created! Lord DIO will reign over reality without the interference of the Joestar bloodline, and I will be there to aid him every step of the way! Allow me to give you your reward: a front-row seat to the end of Creation, and the beginning of a beautiful new world!”

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>>29787950
>Suddenly, the sun sets, and you find yourself on the roof of the main building, Pucci’s hands resting on your shoulder blades
>And just as suddenly, the sun rises
>And then sets again
>The sun begins to rocket across the sky, creating an eye-searing arc of color that illuminates the world and just as quickly vanishes
>Entire days pass in the span of a breath, and the earth turns faster than it was ever supposed to, rotating into infinity as the cosmos crash together in the far reaches of outer space and the universe is crushed into oblivion
>And you throw [Saturn’s Children] down around you, slamming yourself and Pucci to the roof
“I won’t let you remake the universe!”
>Harder and harder you press, hoping to use the extreme gravity to destroy Enrico Pucci’s skull
>He twitches rapidly under the effects of your Stand, seemingly trying to find an escape
>Though he zips around the rooftop, always stuck directly to the tile, he can’t pull himself up to climb over the edge of the roof
>”Damn you boy! You’re too late! Even though I can’t escape, [Made In Heaven] will still unmake everything! Lord DIO’s will shall live on forever!”
>Your back leaves the roof
>Looking above, you see that an incomprehensibly massive celestial body has arrived in the solar system, probably to assimilate it
>In the center, you see a black dot, stark against the searing white of the stars that are now so close to the Earth
>As the gravity of the new universe sucks you towards the great amalgamation of planets, stars, and nebulae in the sky, a great and terrible roar fills your ears, the sound akin to a trillion tortured souls
>The supermassive black hole’s tidal pull, millions of times stronger than anything you can do with [Saturn’s Children], sucks you towards its event horizon
>Then you’re through, and everything goes black

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>>29787955
>You can’t see anything, but it feels like you’re floating
>Blearily, you open your eyes to find that you are surrounded by a great void
>Flecks of light dance lazily all around you
>Is this the new universe? Or are you dead?
>”Anonymous?”
>Your head snaps up as you look around for the source of the voice
>It’s very familiar, but there’s no way she-
>”Anonymous, I’m glad to see that the dream went well.”
>Princess Luna!
>Wait, the dream?
“What the hell do you mean, “the dream”? That was a dream? I saw the universe die, Luna! It was so real I-“
>”I’m well aware. After all, I orchestrated that dream to test your combat abilities. I wanted to see how you’d react.”
>She at least has the decency to look guilty about it
>”What I didn’t expect was that it would result in the destruction of the universe or that it would hurt you so much emotionally. I created that dream using small snippets of your memories, and I decided to choose the fantasy event you remembered with the most urgency, while still being related to Stands. Hence why you remembered things occurring differently than they actually did.”
>A moment passes
>”I am sorry to have caused you so much distress Anon, but I wanted to see what you could do and what you were willing to do if I pushed you far enough.”
>She smiles softly, unable to look you in the eye
>”What I saw impressed me greatly though. You are able to think on your feet, and to use your surroundings to your advantage in even the most unlikely places. Though you lack the physical power of a true warrior, you more than make up for it with your Stand’s great ability and are able to utilize that to its fullest potential. I have every confidence that you are well-equipped to deal with the Stand problems that have been cropping up around Ponyville, so though you may not want to hear it just now you’ve earned a congratulations from me.”

>>29787962
>She glances up at you, and you take the opportunity to glare at her
>Though she shrinks back a little, she holds your gaze
“I’m not happy about this, but I can understand why you did it. In the future ask before you decide to screw with my dreams again, alright? I don’t want to have to kill any more people. It felt so REAL, Luna. I almost threw up.”
>She nods once in response, somber once more
>Breaking eye contact, you glance around the dreamscape and something occurs to you
“Luna, how did you know what my Stand was capable of? You don’t have one, right?”
>The princess smirks at you from behind her bangs
>”Well perhaps it was the power of my own Stand, [Flying In A Blue Dream], that allowed me to see yours. Or perhaps it was simply because I was inside your head, seeing things from your own perspective. The world may never know.”
She flashes you a cheeky grin and opens a portal in the void next to her
>”With that I am off. I’ll send you a letter in advance next time I want to do something like this to your dreams. Until then Anon, sleep tight.”
“Seeya Luna. Safe travels through the uh, the collective unconsciousness I guess.”
>The blue princess waves goodbye to you before slipping through the portal, and you drift back down into a dreamless sleep

>>29787966
And there it is. More than three months since I first agreed to write the damn thing and it's finally finished. I hope you like it.

Pastebin right here: https://pastebin.com/YbMARP67

As always, gibe feedback pls. I want to know what you guys did or didn't like, so if you feel the need to yell at me about terrible writing or twists go ahead and do it. Cameo, I especially want to know what you think of this story. Does it capture your Anon well or poorly? Give me some feedback people.

Alright it's 7 AM over here in Scootland,
so I'm going to go to sleep for the next 9 hours.
Night guys.

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>>29784335
I fully understand the 'getting burnt out' thing, hell I'm more or less on sabbatical myself at the moment. Good to have you back though mate.

Any chance of the Josuke vs. Rainbow Dash ASB occurring?

What character from your favourite story would you like to see against a actual JoJo character of your choice.

I.e Erich Rammstein vs Allesi and his stand Sethan

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>>29787981
Byoutiful
All of it
Especially Anon

>>29789143

Maybe after this chapter. I don't really have a plan on it right now, but I'm sure something will strike me. And I'd rather not rush it, lest I make it stupid.

>>29790142
That would be pretty neato. Erich had his Stand since birth, too. So it'd be fun to see two shadow based Stands to go at it.

Another thing. Nazis gassed pedophiles.

>>29781969
But can her science defeat my Boop?

bit of a question, does any one have any tips on writing a stand battle?

>>29787981

That was nice describing what looked to be the end of the universe. Still amazing overall.

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>>29787981
You DID IT!
That was an intense battle. I honestly didn't know who was going to win right til the very end.
The setting for the battle and their reasons to fight were great. And that ending with Luna was a nice touch to justify the whole thing.
It definitely was worth the wait.

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>>29787981
The opening post was beautifully written, and the battle had surprisingly strong motivations and a great environment. The continuous downturn in Anon's power fits the JoJo arc, and the lack of clear moral lines made each hit wonderfully dramatic. I wanna know what Luna's Stand does.

As for criticism, there were a couple of lines that felt self-conscious, like "Time to stop starting sentences with adverbs..." and "Should’ve just held her net back with [Saturn’s Children]". It's the sort of thing people write when they're hyperaware of the text and want to preempt criticism ("Hey, why didn't he just hold her net back?!"), but unless it's plot-critical most of that never occurs to the reader. Also, having the final attack be premeditated and go off without a hitch felt too straightforward for the final clash of a JoJo battle. More on that below.

>>29791183
My go-to recipe is this:

Give the antagonist an upper hand - if their Stand has an exploitable weakness, make sure they've taken measures to shore it up. If luck enters into the battle, put it on their side.

Then, define some condition by which the hero can lose the battle without being K.O.'d - the baddie touches them, they show fear, they lose a wager, they don't get to Point B first, a piece of information falls into enemy hands, etc.

Then, throughout the battle, show off the enemy's powers, have the hero exhaust whatever obvious means of attack they have, and show them slowly losing ground. Make them behave desperately.

Finally, at the climax, have the failure condition met. At the moment that happens, the hero reveals whatever shell game they've been playing or they come up with a novel usage of their Stand, and they win. That moment of peripety, the ｢dramatic reversal of fortune｣, is a defining feature of JoJo: convince the audience the situation's hopeless until they give up, then prove to them that they should never give up.

>>29790180
Glad you liked it m8. That was all the reward I needed after writing this.

>>29791225
>>29791996
Thanks guys, I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it. More on the way in a week or so.

>>29792006
Thanks for the critique. I won't say I wanted to change the formula or anything, since I am genuinely glad to be done with this story. I just wanted to hurry the confrontation along but I felt like I cheapened the final showdown with Jolyne by just killing her outright, so I added the end of the universe to try and make up for that.

As for Luna's Stand...

STAND NAME: [FLYING IN A BLUE DREAM]
STAND MASTER: PRINCESS LUNA
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SINl5JY7LhI
ABILITY: Allows its user to traverse the collective dreams of the world, no matter where they are or what shape they're in. Also allows the user some degree of control over dreams, such as taking memories or thoughts and giving them form within the dreamscape. The user’s body must fall asleep for this ability to be used, though sleep can be “forced” if the user concentrates hard enough. Luna might be able to use her ability to survive in the dreamscape if her physical body is destroyed, much like Yoshihiro Kira and [Atom Heart Father].

King bumpson

>>29785610
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/29674671/#q29692462

Is that what you were after?

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>>29790142
Well, from the top of my head...
>Indigo's ｢Nails for Breakfast｣ vs. The A. Phex Brothers' ｢Schott Key 1｣ and ｢Schott Key 2｣ .
>Rarity's ｢I'M DESIGNER｣ vs. Bruno's ｢Sticky Fingers｣

>>29790142
[METROPOLIS] vs [Vitamin C] mite b cool

I think [ANONYMOUS] vs literally any character would make for an interesting battle with interesting banter

Angel Rammstein vs high-school aged Shizuka Joestar or maybe Mannish Boy would be an interesting set of circumstances

I am curious about how [Fire In The Church] vs [Starman Platinum] would go, and if Jotaro would bust out the time stop then and there if Anon used [FITC] on Jolyne

>>29794225
>Starman Platinum
Fuck

Sounds like Ziggy's Requiem Stand

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>>29794230
>[Starman Platinum]
I don't even know how that would work.

Also...
>[Saturn's Children] vs. [I'm a Rock]
>[Du Hast] vs. [Soft Machine]
>[White Rabbit] vs. [Goo Goo Dolls]
>[Go Zone] vs. [Kraftwerk]
>[Dragon Force] vs. [Hierophant Green]

>>29781969

>>29790142
｢Anonymous｣ vs. ｢Mandom｣

>>29793112
Yes thank you Anon-San I owe you one.

Are you guys still interested in the concept of [Black Racers] from last thread?

I think someone, might have been Star, wanted a 5-way Applejack ASB

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>>29796829
I am very interested in [Black Racers].
I wasn't asking for an ASB, although it would be rad, but I just wanted to point out that we do have quite a few AJs.
Now we need more Apple Blooms.

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>>29795748
Funnily enough The True Man's World arc and Mandom was my main point of reference for the ｢BEST OF YOU｣ fight.

Also this may be presumptuous of me but.
>Stan(d)on In Equestria is one of Ditherer's favourite stories.
>mfw

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>>29797126
Nothing presumptuous about it, he's probably the best writefriend in the whole thread, and he always has some good constructive criticism if you ask for it.

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>>29797126
I remembered that fight just after I posted and thought it might already cover the same ground, but I still want to see one of them injured and the other one take down the opponent by storm. That or a Stand like ｢Highway Star｣ where Rainbow is fast enough to beat it and the challenges come from helping ｢Anonymous｣ make it to the finish line with her.

Great premise taken in really strong directions, great battles that are more modern and investigative for the heroes than a lot of mine, even god-tier intros and outros.

<3

>>29797162
>>probably the best writefriend in the whole thread
>not the industrious 20 chapters and awesome Stands of Cameo
>not the strong ideas, awesome climaxes and consistent support to other writers of StarAnon
>not the sense of comedic pitch of the real OG Fuckface

>>29796829
I asked into it. We do have enough, although Aus pointed out that RD and AJ now both have Anonymous for a Stand, and they're always a great matchup.

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>>29797240
Well if you insist...

Cameo puts out incredible chapters, fantastic battles that play with your expectations like any good JoJo writer should, and he's very prolific. He may have written the most of any writefag in this thread.

StarAnon has been consistently supportive of me ever since I showed up in these threads, always congratulating me on finishing a chapter and telling me how cool it was, and even though it's been a while since his last story, he always sticks around to help buoy the writers who post. The stuff he writes is true JoJo quality, and even has an element of the absurd that a lot of other stories lack. That bizarre nature he imbues his stories with is what makes his writing Stand out among the others. He's my nigga.

Fuckface of course has a rather different version of Anon that lends his stories a sense of absurdity and allows him to pull off jokes that would feel out of place with other Anons. The fact that he basically made Anon a wigger automatically adds a boost to the humor of his stories simply because of the way his Anon normally acts, and his Stand only adds to that. His comedic timing is also bretty gud. Come back soon Fuckface.

And then there's you, who is always ready to step in with praise and constructive criticism for those that ask for it. You are a very accomplished prose writer, capable of painting a picture with as few words as possible and able to keep the audience on the edge of their computer chairs with your pacing, diction, formulas, and the absolutely insane Stands you come up with all over the place. Both of your stories feature a wide cast of characters and multiple viewpoints, which most other writers here tend to avoid, and I think that aspect of your stories makes them really unique here because it feels like the reader is experiencing more of the world you've built when they follow another character.

Tl;dr each writer here has their own strengths and they're all cool.

>>29797289
Well said the one thing I love most about these threads is how all the writefags and Anons are so nice and supportive of eachother even here on 4chan if you haven't updated for a week or month or two everyone still gathers around to have you back and most replies to writefags are just compliments on their work rather then just lurking and silently reading this is a great community and I only hope it grows. Thank you for making these threads as good as they are from the writefags to the odd Art / anonymous fag even a bump or a imagine is a great contribution here.

>>29797926
We're certainly head and shoulders above the rudeness and scathing remarks of the Magicless Anon and Unattractive Ponies threads. The anons there are all argumentative assholes.

I'm glad everyone ITT is so level-headed and calm, because it seems like everyone really thinks their posts through when they reply to one another.

So I'm watching Dragon Ball Super, and I'm watching something about a multi universe tournament. The rules are the fight lasts for 48 minutes. Ten fighters from every universe participate in a team battle Royale. No killing, no weapons, and no flying. You win against opponents via ko or ringout. The universe team with the most people left on the arena wins. If you lose, your universe is destroyed.

So the question on my mind is, what if the Jojoverse were participating? Who would you pick for your team and why?

>>29797240
>>29797289
>>29797926
>>29798385
I love you too guys.
And in the spirit of love, I'm bumping with a stand idea I was eventually going to use in a story.

>Stand Name:[All you need is love]
>User:ATM Machine in Canterlot.

Destructive Power: None
Speed: None
Range: None
Durability: A
Precision: A
Dev. Potential: E

Description: It is a pink ATM machine that appears randomly in Canterlot.
Anyone can see it and use it.
Those who use it can exchange their love for money. The machine grants a list of things they love and how much money they will recieve in exchange. The user can select the kind of currency they want.
It never runs out of money. Once the exchange is complete, the user will never feel love again for that object but their feelings will be replaced by either indifference, or in some cases, loathe. This effect can't be undone by any means.

>>29799266

>TFW an ATM machine has a better control of their Stand than Holly does.

>>29799333
Great trips.
But then again...
https://youtu.be/wRFpkysHCzc

>>29799390

Still no explanation on how inanimate objects are better Stand users than Holly. Y'know, things without emotions or thoughts of their own?

>>29799234
Jotaro, DIO, Pucci, Kira, Jolyne, Giorno, and Gappy by virtue of being extremely powerful and/or adaptive in battle. I'm assuming all of them have their full complement of abilities sans GER, for which Giorno would have the arrowhead for a nice subplot where Diavolo trails them to the battleground to try to steal it.

As for non-main characters, I'd pick J.Geil, Oyecomova, and Ringo Roadagain. The first two for their immense power and the threat they present, and Ringo because he'd eventually be able to defeat any opponent who wasn't taking him seriously and didn't know precisely how he triggered [Mandom].

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=flC83BYuUjg

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>>29799540
>inanimate objects
>without emotions or thoughts of their own
>implying

>>29800500
Incidentally, what did you name the picture after?

>>29800191
What the fuck is this abomination and why did you post it here?
And why does it kind of fit?

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>>29800500
>OS
I was not aware that was a thing.
>>29799540
Now, I may be grasping at straws here, but I think it was in Oriental Folklore Shinto? that everything had a spirit within.
One example of this would be the Kodama like in the Miyazaki films, which when you think about it they may have been some sort of inspiration for [Les Feuilles] on Shakedown Street during Part 8.
But then again, this is just me guessing.

>>29800604
Huh. That's a novel idea...

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>>29800596
Stand: ｢Safe and Sound｣
www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUQTYNYWKV0
User: Heather the Soundboard
Ability: ???

But seriously, yeah, I'd go with >>29800604

>>29800706
That's hilarious, cause from the start I've had a similarly named Stand in mind for one of my stories.

Stand Name: [REDACTED, Safe And Sound]
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uXj8FM7lTrw
Stand User: That's a big spoiler
Ability: ALSO REDACTED

Bedtime Bump

I might post the little I have written about [Black Racers], I dunno. We'll see.

[Fire in The Church] trying out the Jojo Face Mask Make Up.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UbLdL3dQLkY

>>29781969
The human, he is evil.

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>>29799234
If we have to make a 10 character team for this, I think I would go with...

>Erich Rammstein with [Benzin]
>Trixie Lulamoon with [Steal Another Fantasy]
>Golden Harvest with [Fineshrine]
>Applejack with [Black Racers]
>Rainbow Dash with [ANONYMOUS]
>Cloudy Quartz with [Hollywood the Cracked]
>Cloudchaser with [Scissor Sister]
>Button Mash with [Electric Funeral]
>Sonic Youth with [MEGATRONIC]
>Anon Y. Mous with [Fire in The Church]

I'm not sure if we can use dead characters, otherwise the list may be slightly different, but I think this group would balance out attack, defence and support in a battle royal.

Then again, I don't think they would hold out long against the Jojoverse team.

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>>29801781

>Around Equestria, ponies war over a strange set of Corpse Parts.
>If anyone had a full set, they'd see the bones belonged to three organisms, each clearly bipedal, tall, and soaked with magic.
>They also clearly don't belong in the world of Equestria, and bearing them twists the soul, giving them an evil spirit known as Stand.
>A full set of any one offers power greater than any Stand in play.
>All three together are more powerful than all of the rest combined.
>Pre-national mythology knows the bearers, although few living have connected the dots, as Danny, Megan and Molly.

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>>29801578
>pic related; rare images of [Fire in The Church]

>>29802475
Damn it Ditherer, stop coming up with damn good hooks that make me want to up and write a new, different story.

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｢HEAVEN’S DOOR OVER HEAVEN｣ bump

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>>29793732
Yeah! My girl would fuck 'em up!

>>29797289
Gotta agree, way more than one of my chapters wouldn't have existed without Star and you applauding at the end.

Also, thanks; the way you describe my stories makes me want to go read them. I really like the thought of something I wrote keeping someone in suspense. And I'm glad the viewpoints are working, I worry about them sounding too alike.

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Writing bump

>when the longest thing you've ever written is a jojo/mlp crossover greentext.

>>29804035
I no longer feel absurd about the amount of shit I've written for this thread. It's been a wild ride and I've barely even begun the stories yet.

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>>29804280
Dammit, forgot pic

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>>29804281
>When for some stupid reason your tired and think characters are actual characters in story rather then characters in writing.
>mfw I think Omnee has made 150,643 characters in his story.

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>>29804035
>>29804280
I have to start a new Doc for every chapter because my diet computer won't render more than twelve pages, but a word-counter says I've written around 73,887 words of JoJo-related stuff. And I'm hardly a third through either of them.

tfw the last time I wrote actively was years ago and 1000 words in a day was a Herculean effort

>>29804871
That's exactly enough characters to replace the population of Matagalpa, Nicaragua.

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Why do they look so good together?

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>>29804933
>pic related

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>>29804871
>mfw

>>29804925
>1000 words in a day was a herculean effort
I know what you mean, I barely used to be able to write short stories and now I'm in the middle of creating a story that is currently over 1/4 the size of To Kill A Mockingbird and nowhere near done. Feels great to write the way I do now, busting out like 1200 words with no problems.

>>29804933
Chibi killer queen x Lyra is a cute ship.

>>29802352
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xyxOXjZHl9U

Der Mensch, er ist böse. (x2)
(Man, he is evil. (x2))

Der Mensch ist böse.
(Man is evil.)
Der Mensch muss besser und böser werden.
(Man must become better and eviler.)
Der Mensch ist böse.
(Man is evil.)
Der Mensch muss besser und böser werden.
(Man must become better and eviler.)
So lehre ich.
(So [do] I teach.)

Auch den Guten steht ein Edler im Weg(e).
(Also to the good [ones], a noble [one] stands in the way.)
Und selbst wenn sie ihn einen Guten nennen.
(And even when they call him a good [man].)
So wollen sie ihn damit bei Seite bringen.
(They want to egde him aside that way.)
Auch den Guten steht ein Edler im Weg(e).
(Also to the good, a noble [one] stands in the way.)
Und selbst wenn sie ihn einen Guten nennen.
(And even when they call him a good man.)
So wollen sie ihn damit bei Seite bringen.
(They want to egde him aside that way.)

Der Mensch ist böse.
(Man is evil.)
Der Mensch muss besser und böser werden.
(Man must become better and eviler.)
Der Mensch ist böse.
(Man is evil.)
Der Mensch muss besser und böser werden.
(Man must become better and eviler.)
Der Mensch ist böse.
(Man is evil.)
Der Mensch muss besser und böser werden.
(Man must become better and eviler.)

Der Mensch.
(The human. / Man.)

[Bump]

>The average female height is 164 cm
>using this knowledge for the average EqG height
>Modern JoJos are Reasonably tall. Early JoJo's are 6'5" giants.
>compare the difference between the two.

Jonathan, Joseph and Jotaro would dwarf the female students of CHS

>>29806623
So does JoeJoe in Writroplex's green.

>>29806623
And it'd be hilarious

>>29806664
>>29807584
>EqG wants to smooch with JoJo / JoeJoe.
>has to grab a small step ladder just
To be able to reach head heights otherwise ends up hugging crotch region.

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AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

I didn't like any of the stuff I wrote down for the [Black Racers] concept so I just deleted all of it. Fuck.

On the plus side, I have a blank slate and a clear head about what I'm writing later.

Night boys.

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>>29804933

>>29808920
I like this artist and their style but I feel like I'm just looking at men here with pony re-skins I'd love if he at least made them a decent A size or low B so i can just mentally confirm to myself that these are mlp characters not just Kira role playing as Lyra.

Continued from: https://pastebin.com/kwxd0Djx

>You're Jojo.
>You approach Angel.
>She looks deep in thought.
>It feels awkward, how silent she is.
>It's only more awkward as you stand next to her.
>You decide to break the silence.
“Bit for your thoughts?”
>She looks over at you, and sighs.
>”Dinky lied.”
>She did?
“When?”
>Angel shakes her head.
>”Ricky isn’t a Nazi.”
>Oh.
>To be honest, you actually heard someone talking about this before.
>What did they say?
“Umm, Angel? I think someone said they saw your brother walking around town with a nazi hat and jacket on.”
>Angel snaps at you.
>”You didn't see it, though! It's just hearsay!”
>You throw your hands up defensively.
“But what if it's true, Angel? What then?”
>Angel stomps her foot.
>”Then he has a really good reason! He’s a good person and he always has a reason for everything he believes!”
>You see Angel turn away sadly, clutching her arm.
>”Ricky...He believes in God, and wants me to believe as well. He talks a lot about how loving and caring Jesus was, and how we should all be like that. And he also talks about our grampa, and how heroic he was. He's always trying to do what's right for everyone around him, especially for me and mommy. So even if he is a Nazi, then he's still not a bad guy.”
>You see her brow furrow with worry.
>You didn't mean to worry her.
>You grab her, pulling her into a hug.
”Sorry, Angel. I didn't mean to make you upset.”
>She sighs, and returns the hug.
>”It's okay, Jojo.”

>>29809586
Unfortunately, that's it for now. I figured I'd at least give you all something, since I made you wait so long. Real update next time.

>>29808224
Oh no, Omnee's fallen under the effect of ｢YOU’LL COWARDS DON’T EVEN SMOKE CRACK｣; and insidious stand that has forced him to reset all his ｢PROGRESS｣ to ｢aERO｣!

It's probably too late now, but I thought it was a pretty strong concept, but then again I may just be biased towards pony characters that have Anon tied to them somehow, who knows?

>>29809910
Oh, I actually meant that I had written a full chapter based on the original post I made about it, and that I was unsatisfied with THAT. The original "prompt" is still there and I'm using it to build a much more satisfying story around the concept.

>>29809589
>Angel's discovering the truth about Erich
Oh no, she's gonna be upset and then it's all gonna be bad

>Celestia comes to this reality via dimensional portal.
>She intends on introducing herself to one of the governments of this world.
>Her magic detects some strange anomalies.
>She flies to where she feels the anomalies coming from.
>She arives in Japan, because it's always japan.
>She notices the extremely dangerous Mary Sue imaginary friends who keep fighting to the death.
>She noticed couldn't imagine the horrors they's bring if they came to Equestria.
>She grabs the sun and flings it at the earth before portaling back to Equestria.

>>29810042
What if 'the sun' she grabbed was actually the stand the sun from part 3 the totally useless one kinda like the real one but just a stand variant.

Finding out even our sun is fake would scar her for life.

>>29810291
Jesus christ, that'd be incredible

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>>29806623
>in Japan it is 154cm
>this is the height of love live females.
>Imagine lovelive / JoJo crossover where Jotaro goes to the u's school.
>pic related
Tiny anime girls mixed with manly edgy giant sounds great.

>>29811381
https://youtu.be/-iljl7VWybk

Aw yiss, taking story ideas from Part 8 and putting em in my stories

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>>29812075
>Anon has to use the Rokkaka Fruit to merge Celestia and Luna.
>The Pie Sisters are Rock Ponies.
Could you imagine?

>>29806623
>>29811381
>mfw I'm this tall
Who else ?

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>>29804973

>>29812720
Being 6ft 5inches is perfect you're generally huge and no one messes with you, if you're any bigger you look like a mutant as the 6ft people look like toddlers and the manlets are ants.

>>29812300
It's involved with [Black Racers], that's all I'm saying.

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SUqScSl2xFI

>>29805527
"selbst" sounds off in the song.

[Bump Platinum]

>>29781969

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>when you have a eureka moment and come up with a title for your chapter that works.

>>29815539
Truly, THAT is the greatest high

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>>29815539
>>29815945
Agreed. The name of the next Coco is something I'm particularly proud of.

However, I've been sick today, and unable to finish anything I started. Decided to jump out of the rut by finishing something less ambitious of mine. I'll post it all when it's finished.

When is a bump not a bump? When it's a list of all the songs referenced in your story, that's when.

https://youtu.be/jNEk5Yf-MYY?list=PLR3JpmG2zJhe_H-1ZE9TkFMSc3etHpt9d

>>29816413
Soft and bump

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>>29809910
Funny enough, if I made a Stand from my favorite song, it'd be called ｢Rainbow Dash｣ and mirror ｢Anonymous pretty perfectly｣.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gwYELmZUGjk

Also, bump.

>>29818864
Oh shit she better stay away from the arrow.
Heaven forbid she gains a stand.
Or worse already has a stand and goes full requiem...

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Alright, here’s a nice day’s work for a JoJo Friday. Not CRBA or Coco, but I started it a few threads ago and I felt bound to finish it.

>Be Bon Bon, staring out a window.
>You hate being on this train as much as Lyra loves it.
>She's nearly bouncing in her seat.
>Good thing she can't see your expression.
>Fillydelphia's probably freezing at this time of year.
>Plus you're missing a baking convention in Canterlot to come here.
>...
>She's going to spend all three days in the same museum, isn't she?
>Who are you kidding, of course she is.
>She finally notices you aren't smiling.
>"Come on, Bonnie, it's a whole new city! It's like an adventure!"
>As always, she's got intrepid spirit up to her eyeballs.
>You snort.
"More like a BADventure."

>Two hours later...
>"Come on, just a few minutes inside!"
"Lyra, we haven't even checked into the hotel yet!"
>"That's why it'll only be a few minutes! I just want to get a good idea of the layout."
>She looks ridiculous with her heavy saddlebags still on.
>"Pleeease?"
>She looks at you with the Eyes.
>Aw, fuck.
>Fuck!
>You bitch!
>And so you're inside the Fillydelphian Alternate History Museum.

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>>29820078
>Half an hour later, Lyra's still glued to the hoax exhibits.
>Some of them are grainy framed photographs.
>Some are made of little plastic figurines.
>Didn't you once see some foals playing with those?
>She spent ten straight minutes inspecting a big snowglobe full of sand.
>The whole time she was softly mouthing words, like she always does.
>Auditioning explanations to foist on you in the middle of the night.
"Lyra."
>She startles from whatever corner she's rifling through.
>When she remembers you're there, she grins pleadingly and whispers.
>"Sorry."
>You roll your eyes.
"Lyra, we're the only ones here. I haven't even seen an owner. We'll come back."
>"Yeah... Yeah, sorry."
>She heads for the door.
>You follow behind her, and she opens it.

>Outside, the sun isn’t shining.
>The buildings are different.
>Thick mushy-wet grass has replaced the cobblestones.
>In the distance, desert stretches to the horizon.
>What.

ボンボンの奇妙な冒険
｢Bon Bon's Bizarre Badventure｣

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>>29820084
>"It can't be. It- there's no- oh my-..."
>Lyra stops trying to start sentences and takes a deep breath.
>Then she bolts across the grass like a mare possessed.
"Lyra?!"
>You shout after her from the doorway, hesitating.
>She's galloping toward the desert.
>You run after her.
"Lyra!"
>To her credit, she doesn't leave line of sight.
>It won't affect the ear-pulling you perform later, though.
>And the buildings don't look any better the more of them you pass.
>They're all cream-colored, squat but deeply curvy.
>Like they were all spun on some gigantic potter's wheel.
>You shake your head and keep running.

>Lyra's stopped at the edge of the desert.
>A wind scatters the sand, redundantly.
>She follows the particles like she's going to catch one on her tongue.
"Lyra, what's-"
>"This isn't Equestria! We're in another version of the present!"
>You don't quite roll your eyes.
"How would you tell?"
>She looks at the sand like you look at flies before you swat them.
>Then her magic freezes a clump, allowing the rest to pull away.
>"Everyday sand is just tough rock that's been broken down by water over time. Under a microscope, each grain turns into a shell, or a gem. But here..."
>She casts a complicated spell under her breath, and it takes a minute.
>But a large, ethereal magnifying lens shimmers within her magic.
>Through it, the grains zoom into new focus.
>They're all jagged, black, brittle.
>She turns to you like she's expecting a sticker.
>"It's all the same! Nearly everything in Equestria was burnt somehow, and it was converted into an endless pony-made desert without water! Some explorers theorize it's the universe's warning not to stray too far from the beaten path! We're in the World of the Plastic Beach!"

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>>29820099
>You digest that.
"Then what's this?"
>You gesture to the... town?
>She looks at it like she hadn't seen it before.
>"I, uh. ...Huh."
>That's what you thought.
>"Maybe I can help you two."
>You jump and spin around, putting Lyra behind you.
>The speaker's a stallion, middle-aged, with a sunhat over his brow.
>Mostly he looks like the buildings, pudgy and beige.
>His cutie mark's a black rectangle, with a white dot on its top half and five on the bottom.
"Who are you?"
>He smiles, and drawls an answer.
>"The name's Fats. Domino Fats."
>He tips the hat back and looks over you.
>"Welcome to ｢Strawberry Fields｣."

>Mr. Fats takes you into a seemingly arbitrary building.
>The furniture inside was all part of the walls, undecorated and yawning.
>He and Lyra then proceed to have a rip-roaring Q&A session.
>You're exploring the barren house, but you catch most of it.
>He visited the museum once, and had the same experience as you.
>When he arrived, there was only desert.
>He explored it, but couldn't find the door again.
>Since then, only two others have shown up, neither friendly.
>But the town provides him with stuff to scavenge.
>And then he found it, he understood the name on instinct.
>Lyra exclaims at that.
>"You mean the Stand phenomenon is real?!"

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>>29820118
>You reenter the main room from the equally empty upstairs.
"'Stand phenomenon'?"
>She has to calm herself down for a moment.
>"It was coined by the only the coolest theoretical magician who ever lived, Stand Clear! He was a pegasus who went to the absolute top of the Canterlot university circuit just by giving unicorns new ideas, and the last thing he tried working on was the effect of changing history on cutie marks."
"Like... Princess Twilight?"
>"Yeah! Except, y'know, he never got as far as her. But he thought that pony's marks, their destinies, all came together to make up the world, like a big sweater. And if somepony came into another one, their destiny would have to be resized and stitched into a new place somewhere, and there would be a big, unpredictable burst of magical energy tied to them!"
>She finishes.
>You examine your hooves, one at a time.
"I don't feel it."
>Before she can respond, Mr. Fats speaks up.
>"As interesting as this will all be to science, I think it would be for the best if we discussed our retreat."
>Lyra swivels towards him, and you pay much closer attention.
>"The door won't close automatically, but it won't stay open forever either. Unfortunately, I can't go through it yet, because of those two others I mentioned."
>Lyra's face becomes a mask of complete sympathy.
>"You want to save them?"
>He shakes his head.
>"They won't let me leave."

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>>29820134
>After he tells you about them, you excuse yourself and Lyra.
>Then you drag her outside.
"You can't really think this is a good idea. Tell me you honestly think that."
>She's giving you the Eyes again.
"No. No. We're not endangering ourselves to steal away some piece of magical - hoodoo - whatever!"
>"But if they have a Waystone, they could totally be keeping him here, and us too!"
"Then why didn't he tell us that?"
>"Probably to stop you worrying!"
>She boops your nose.
>You glare at her, and she doesn't disintegrate.
>...
>You huff.
"I don't trust him."
>As a point of honor, you haven't trusted anything since you arrived.
>"We're on an honest-to-Celestia adventure, Bonnie! If we stick with it a little longer, we'll be famous when we get back!"
>Beneath the cheerfulness, she needs you.
>That's what you believe.
>Without you, Lyra Heartstrings would fall into a ditch and never find her way out to safety.
>And that's why you agree to go along and obtain this "Waystone".

>The two aren't hard to find.
>They're camped out in a cave just past the outskirts of town.
>Mr. Fats isn't eager to say how long he and they have been here.
>Gritty nasty sand gets everywhere on you.
>Eventually, though, the three of you make it over.
>You're looking for a big sapphire chunk of rock, bright and glowy.
>Trying to get the drop on them makes you nervous.
>Especially because there's only one entrance.
>What if these guys have Stand, too?
>You don't see any signs of life or other towns around, but who knows?
>When you actually reach the mouth of the cave, you discover the inside is lit by shards of green rock jutting from the walls.
>They're clearly enchanted, glowing more the closer you come to them.
>Lyra closes her eyes and uses her horn to illuminate the entrance anyway.

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>>29820144
>The inside looks like a real room, at least by the standards of the town at your flank.
>It's square, with hard edges on the walls carefully sanded away and a hallway leading further in.
>You look back at Fats, expecting some kind of tour.
>He doesn't even look back at you.
>"They'll be in here somewhere..."
>You take the lead through the hallway, for a lack of anywhere else to go.
>Curiously, you don't move downwards, into a deeper section of the rock.
>In fact, the chamber you enter would be too big to fit inside of a cave.
>Although you thought you were hallucinating, there's grass.
>It's a blue-skied meadow, with the occasional flower.
>Lyra bounds out from behind you, taking it all in.
>You almost expect her to recognize it by some six-word name.
>But instead she starts looking at the flowers.
>Smells one.
>Leans in...
>You tug her mane back before she can eat it.
>She smiles at you sheepishly.
>Fats speaks, and his voice echoes a little.
>"This is their place. It's all magic and illusions, which is why there's no sun in the sky."
>Now that he mentions it, there aren't any clouds either.
>Lyra marvels.
>"The grass is real, though! It takes incredible magical talent to grow something like this!"
>"Thank you."
>The voice is a mare's, a little squeaky.
>From a rustling of grass on your left, you see the two of them.
>What surprises you most is that you've seen them around.
>A blue mare with a white-blue mane, a tan stallion with brown hair.
>A pair of hourglass cutie marks.
>And around the mare's neck, a necklace ending in a glowing blue stone.
>The stallion speaks, and his voice is like a documentary narrator.
>"I see you've come to try stealing from the Caravan again."

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>>29820149
>Be Lyra Heartstrings.
>Oh gosh oh gosh oh gosh.
>Are these time travelers?
>Something even cooler than time travelers?!
>Domino shouts back at them.
>"The ECR doesn't own anything! Hoof over the stone and we'll all go our separate ways!"
>You give the gem a look.
>Huh...
>That looks familiar, like you read about it somewhere...
>Something about the World of the Plastic Beach, what was it?
>Bonnie talks while you think.
>"We don't want trouble. We only want to go back where we came from."
>The blue girl uptalks.
>"Then you shouldn't be walking on Caravan territory."
>"We don't even know what this Caravan is, so-"
>The chestnut guy cuts her off.
>"The Eternal Caravan of Reincarnation. This world belongs to us, and so does the Residuum that anchors it. If you don't already know that, ask Mr. Fats over there."
"The Residuum of Harmony!"
>That's it!
"The remains of the Elements of Harmony in universes that don't have room for them any longer! They're the power sources theorized to keep unlivable realities within reach of travelers from harmonic space!"
>Bonnie glares at you.
>Then she chews on what you just said and glares at everypony else.
>"You're saying we don't need that thing if we want to leave?"
>Domino smiles apologetically.
>Chestnut talks.
>"The Caravan has always existed, here and elsewhere. This--interloper, came in the hopes of stealing our treasure, only protected from retaliation by his Stand. He's never been so bold in broad daylight."
>Each time they say "Caravan", Bonnie glances at you.
>But you've never heard of the Eternal Caravan of Reincarnation.
>Domino:
>"You've got no right to that stone anyway, when it could make a living world a much better place! And besides..."
>He smirks.
>"If you let these two go, they'll go back to the real world and tell all their friends about the ECR! Then you'll have tons of treasure hunters coming here!"
>They consider that.

>>29820164
>Bon Bon puts her hooves up.
>"No, we really, really won't. Believe us, we're not interested in your Caravan or whatever it is you're after."
>Blue, grim:
>"I'm afraid we still can't take that chance."
>Then her horn lights up and she shouts.
>"｢Pulling Teeth｣!"
>Then she fires a bolt of magical energy straight for you.

>"Augh!"

>Celestia, that smarts.
>Be Bon Bon.
>You threw yourself in the way of the spell, and it scorched you.
>You look up at the two of them, fuming.
>The mare looks alarmed.
>”Hers is already developing! Quickly, I’ll deal with the other one!”
>Then, in a fluttering of grass, they’re gone.
>The stallion’s suddenly in front of you, lashing out with a fetlock.
>You take a step back, but your hooves don’t move.
>Ducking the blow, you see the grass has been tied around them, like manacles.
>You tug against it, fruitlessly.
>He spins and unleashes another kick on you, and you press your body into the grass.
>You actually sink into the earth, flattening it like making a snow-angel.
>Something flickers on the edge of your consciousness.
>For a moment, it even supercedes the sounds of Lyra and the mare trading spells.
>Suddenly, the ground lifts you back up.
>The hourglass stallion sneers at you, but you hardly notice.
>What’s that name?
>The one, like a movie you can’t remember, like a song from another life?
>Pr…?
“｢Pram｣?”
>He smashes a hoof into your face.
>When he pulls it back, your nose is bleeding, and your legs are shaking against the restraints.
>He throws another punch.
>And misses.
>His hoof strikes the ground instead.
>”What…?”
>He tries to pull it up, and can’t.
>It looks like a bad pantomime, fake weight.
>Then he starts sweating.
>”｢Neglected Space｣!”

>>29820178
>The grass clumps together, forming a loop around your neck.
>Your restraints disappear as the green tentacle lifts you up into the fake-sky.
>You clutch at it with your hooves, kicking, as he watches.
>”Bonnie!”
>Lyra’s voice cuts through your panic.
”Pr-”
>You suck in air, try to shout.
>”｢Pram｣!”
>It comes out in a gasp, but something connects, running from your hooves to the loop.
>It sags, falling back down to earth like it can’t hold your weight any longer.
>The stallion strains, but can’t seem to stop it.
>After a moment, all four of your hooves touch the ground again.
>｢Pram｣.
>Is this your “Stand”?
>You rip the makeshift noose in half and stomp toward your attacker.
>He grits his teeth, and around you both, the grass tears out of the ground.
>Floating, brushing past you, it forms a patchwork cyclone.
>You stomp on his head.
>But when you connect, he isn’t there any longer.
>A kick to the back of your head sends you reeling.
>You could’ve been at a baking convention right now!
>Another throws your legs out from under you.
>Through the green fury, you see the constant moving figure, a tan blur.
>A kick to your side as you stand keeps you down.
>You turn over onto your back and look up at the constant spinning color.
>”You might as well give up! There’s no way you can disable me if you can’t react in time!”
>You grab a hoofful of the grass beside you, ripping it from the earth.
>Then you throw it into the air.
>It joins the cyclone, and you throw up another burst, and another.
>”Is this your surrender?”
>Deep, throaty laughter.
>But she who laughs last…

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>>29820187
“｢Pram｣.”
>The grass begins to consolidate itself.
>Blades gather and clump around the ones you’ve touched, and then onto each other.
>”Wh-WHAT?!”
>It gathers in a giant sphere, centering around his fetlock, around him.
>The wind goes out.
>And, with a little strain on your part, it crashes down like it’s made of concrete.
>So that’s your magical power, the ability to ｢increase gravity｣?
>Hmm.
>You get to your hooves and rush to help Lyra.

>Be Lyra.
>Your training at Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns has kept you moving up to now..
>Most spells take a while, but a simple Shield is easy for anypony.
>It helps that Blue’s throwing the same basic projectile spells at you.
>Bonnie jumps into the fray with you, heading for your enemy.
>She’s positively steaming!
>”｢Pram｣!”
>”Stay out of this! ｢Pulling Teeth｣!”
>Bon Bon freezes in mid-leap, thrown sideways and tumbling into the landscape.
>Blue smiles savagely, the kind of smile people make while running.
>”I don’t need to land multiple blows like Turner does. ｢Pulling Teeth｣ lets me cause the same damage over and over again!”
>She’s so excited she stands on her back legs, shading her eyes with one hoof against the sunless sky and pointing the other straight at you.
>”After I’ve landed a single hit, your defeat is inescapable!”
>It takes her a moment to realize you’re not paying attention.
>”Hey!”
>She calls after you as you run over to Bonnie.
“Are you alright?”
>She looks really not okay.
>”Grrh, yeah. Yeah, I’m fine. Just lure her over here.”
“But she’ll-”
>Bonnie grunts in pain again.
>”I know. Just let me handle the pain, and try to bring her where I can touch her.”
>Blue stares coolly at both of you.
>You stand up straighter.
“No.”
>”Don’t do anything foolish, Lyra.”
>Bon Bon says, like she’s your mom.
>You crack your withers.
“I’ve got this.”

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>>29820220
>You step, then walk, then run for your enemy.
>She fires a bolt of energy, and you throw up a Shield.
>It shatters, but you continue running.
>Then she turns and aims her horn away from you.
>You see the attack build up in slow-mo.
>Aimed at the mare writhing on the ground behind you.
>Still approaching her, you leap into its path.
>You call up another Shield, but it doesn’t assemble in time.
>Your front right leg bears the brunt of the blast, and you roll.
>Bonnie shouts behind you.
>”Lyra!”
>And that brings you a new sense of clarity.
>You’re certain, 100%, that your Stand is with you.
>Still tumbling, you push yourself to your hooves and keep running.
>Blue waits for you to level a punch at her head, and then you feel the blast again.
>Your fetlock goes wild, your body forced back, and you spin with it.
>Before she can react again, you smack her with your back hooves.
>After you land, you take a breath and spin around, facing her.
>The name hits you, and you feel like if you don’t speak it the power will pass you by.
>Still sitting, you point right at her.
“｢Tag, You're It｣.”
>For a tick, she stands there, frozen in place.
>Then she laughs, hysterically.
>”I feel better than I did before, you dolt!”
>With renewed vigor, she shoots three spells at once, all of them zooming towards you.
>They smash through your shield like a flimsy windowpane.
>You’re thrown back like a ragdoll, scuffing against the grass.
>At least the stains won’t show.
>Then each hit happens again, pushing you further away from her.
>”My Stand’s powerful enough to deal with a pony in one blow! Can yours?!”
>She laughs again.
>Then she stops, grasping her chest like she lost something on it.
>She breathes out in one long exhale.
>And then she falls over.
>K.O.’d.

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>>29820236
>Be Bon Bon.
>As soon as the mare falls over, your wounds heal.
>It feels wet and disgusting.
>Lyra stands up nearby, trotting briskly over to observe her fallen attacker.
>Not all of your damage came from that Stand, but you make it there too.
>She’s inspecting her own hoof.
>Mumbling to herself, she touches the necklace around the mare’s neck.
>It starts madly spinning like it’s been possessed by a ghost.
>The stone, residue-um, whatever, snaps off and goes flying over your head.
>Finally, Lyra touches it again, and it stops.
>”We’ve got superpowers, Bonnie.”
>She says this with the same gravity as announcing a death.
“...We should go home.”
>Having had her adventure, she nods.
>Both of you turn to go back the way you came.
>Then you see that the stone’s gone.
>And Fats is in the distance, galloping for the mouth of the cave.

>Be Domino Fats.
>Luck, as ever, has been on your side the whole time.
>It just took a couple years of patience and a quick wit, and priceless magic is yours.
>Damn Caravaners, they’ll be hounding you to the end of time.
>That is, if you stick around.
>You’re perfectly happy to get back to the Museum and slam the door shut.
>Not that these two beautiful mares wouldn’t get your attention if things were a little different...
>But ｢Strawberry Fields｣ will keep them lost until you get out.
>That certainty’s been your only saving grace against anything, here.
>And the universe will probably fall down around their eyes without this lovely jewel to keep it running.
>Shame.
>They’re hurrying after you through the sand, shouting words you can’t make out.
>You press on.
>Suddenly, something lodges itself in your back leg.

>>29820245
>You stop to look at it, still trotting against the sand.
>It’s a black stone, jagged and heavy.
>Over your shoulder, you can see Bon, the cream one with candy on her flank like a dirty joke from the universe.
>In the air above her, grains of sand are compacting and swirling into a single object.
>Another one of these ash-black spheres.
>Her bouncy green compatriot leaps and smacks it like a volleyball player.
>It rockets straight for you.
>You leap out of the way, dislodging the first projectile, and the second crashes into one of your houses.
>They rush after you, but it’s pointless.
>You might be bleeding, tired, holding the Residuum in your mouth, but you’re already on the threshold.
>You gallop inside, putting a few buildings between your pursuers and beelining for the door.
>Without a clear line of sight, they won’t be able to follow you.
>Aha, there it is!
>Standing wide open, in the middle of the street and all!
>You nearly jump for joy.
>”Not so fast!”
>You startle, and see they’re right behind you, running side by side.
>Behind you, you see your bloody hoofprint patterned against the grass.
>Damn your eyes, you should’ve thought of that.
>Too late now!
>Just run!

>”Get him, Bonnie!”
>Be Bon Bon.
>Lyra slaps her hoof on your back, and you feel energy pouring into you.
>Like an extra wellspring of power inside you has been unlocked.
>He’s already through the door and turning around.
>You pull away from her, kicking up clumps of wet grass around you.
>As he slams the door shut, you jump and kick against it.
”｢PRAM｣!”
>It freezes halfway to closing, and he shoves his whole body against it.
>You can hear him strain as your blood rushes in your ears.
>Then Lyra’s next to you, and she kicks it too.
>The door flings itself open again, and Fats goes flying into the museum.
>You race in after him.

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>>29820257
>Inside, the air feels much cooler, more humid.
>He’s smashed into the exhibit Lyra was so interested in, the sand-globe.
>You guess you recognize it by name, now.
>The “World of the Plastic Beach”.
>Behind you, the door shuts itself.

>Be Domino Fats.
>You’re on terra firma, but so are they.
>You still have the Residuum, which is the important thing.
>Although your Stand’s gone.
>You’ll get another one as soon as you’ve adjusted, you bet..
>They’re glaring down at you.
>You can feel their power, still.
>They’ve got Stands that don’t need adapting.
“Strong souls. Don’t need a lot of rearranging in the big multiverse mix-up.”
>You chuckle, but neither of them appreciate it.
>”Hand over the stone.”
>Bon says, stepping over.
>You smile wide and hold it up.
“What, this old thing? I’ve gotta donate it to science, remember? I don’t know if I can trust you two with it.”
>Her expression doesn’t change.
>It’s matched by Lyra’s as they stand together.
>Strong souls, indeed...
>You sigh and hold it out.
“Well, here, take it.”
>Bon looks at you like she’s been in standoffs before.
>But she hasn’t.
>She reaches out for it...
>And with your other hoof, you fling sand in both of their faces.
>As they recoil you jump to your hooves and scurry for the door.
>In one solid motion, like a dancer, you throw it open, spin through, and shut it behind you.
>It’s only afterwards that you realize you’re not in Equestria, or the Beachworld.
>Above you, the sky is violet, and the stars are out.
>Beneath, there’s grass, and herds of buffalo roaming in the distance.
>You turn around to go back, but the door’s already gone.
>You seethe.
>But.
>You’re still holding the Residuum.
>You can make a way out, given time.
>And maybe there are some nice pilferables in this reality, too.
>With that thought to warm your heart, you pick a direction and start walking.
>This won’t be the last Equestria’s seen of Ol’ Uncle Domino.

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>>29820278
>Be Bon Bon.
>When you and Lyra went back out onto the street, Fats was nowhere to be found.
>When you spun around and looked back in the museum, nothing had changed.
>It took a moment of experimenting on rocks outside to prove you had Stands.
>Which meant there were other universes, or alternate histories, or whatever they were called.
>It meant there were ponies in them who wanted power, and others who wanted secrecy.
>Are there “Caravan” ponies in Ponyville?
>You did recognize them, didn’t you?
>For that matter are there any here, in Fillydelphia, on this street, around that corner?
>You feel the warmth and energy of Lyra press against your side.
>She leans on you, and you stay upright.
>”So...”
>She looks up at you with a lesser version of the Eyes.
>”How about that hotel room?”
>You snort.
“Yeah, let’s get checked in.”
>You beat hooves in the afternoon air.
>You weren’t wrong.
>That was all a “badventure”, alright.
>But, hey...
>At least she enjoyed it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tYM72hs644w

Stand: ｢Hyacinth House｣
User: Fillydelphian Alternate History Museum
Ability: Manifests in the doors of the museum, opening them for adventurous spirits into other universes. If someone damages any of the contents of the museum, the doors will take them to progressively more dangerous locations.

Stand: ｢Strawberry Fields｣
Former User: Domino Fats
Ability: Location Stand. Anyone in range of the Stand becomes naturally 'lost', only able to traverse to any specific point if the user permits it. Additionally, targets gradually lose sight of their goals and motivations, unless somehow reminded of them.

Stand: ｢Pram｣
User: Bon Bon
Ability: Increases gravity on objects the user touches.

Stand: ｢Tag, You're It｣
User: Lyra Heartstrings
Ability: When the user touches something, it fills up with ridiculous levels of energy until it breaks or they touch it again. When used on another pony, it affects their heartbeat.

>>29820307
World: The World of the Plastic Beach
A common terminus for travelers who go too far, sparsely populated even compared to other apocalyptic worlds. Nothing exists on it besides blasted landscapes and ashy sand, and the only livable material on it is magically created by other travelers.

Group: The Eternal Caravan of Reincarnation
Members of the ECR are historical constants, recognizable by their hourglass cutie marks and their appearance in nearly all Equestrian timelines, regardless of whether or not they "should" be in them. All seem to be generated by the cosmos instead of born, but their ultimate purpose is hotly debated. Some see themselves as quiet stewards of history, while others seek power and prestige, or wish to foster some sort of multiversal empire. Through an affinity for powerful magic they pool information with agreeable versions of themselves, and some reproduce by entering and fracturing new timelines, actualizing thousands of their own possible futures. Although individual Caravaners naturally age and die over time, membership stays roughly constant.

Stand: ｢Neglected Space｣
User: Time Turner
Ability: The user can ignore natural spatial limitations within range, making things larger inside than they are outside. There is no upper limit to this power, but larger spaces take proportionally more time to expand. Any space made in this way is under the control of the user, allowing them to manipulate its environment and teleport themselves and what they’re touching to any point within it.

Stand: ｢Pulling Teeth｣
User: Minuette
Ability: Damage inflicted by the user repeats.

https://pastebin.com/C7rsbsjk

>>29820307
Excellent work as always Ditherer.

Is this a one off or the start of a new series though? You're already an absolute madman in my opinion for running CRBA and Coco's concurrently, and I can hardly imagine going for a hat trick.

>>29820315
>>29820307
Holy shit that was fucking crazy, even by your standards. You went above and beyond for the most recent chapter of CCBA, but you went insane and beyond for this short story. I was constantly surprised by whatever the hell was going on and the powers and world you built over just 17 posts really drew me in.

The description you wrote for the ECR especially grabbed my attention, since it's a secret cabal that stretches not just across time, but also across space, and that's wild as fuck.

The Immersion parody also got me,
since that's my favorite Pendulum album

https://lastfm-img2.akamaized.net/i/u/ar0/ad59660640344a0098acbf763173e67a

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>>29820315
Well I'll be...
BADventure is back!
I liked this story. It works wonderfuly as a one-shot, but still it introduces brand new concepts and characters that may return in another story but mayhaps with a different flavour.
Domino Fats is interesting because of those reasons, and so is the Fillydelphian Alternate History Museum.
Now, this may just be me, and I don't want to diss your story in any way, but... I didn't really like Bon Bon and Lyra here.
Intermission to yell at StarAnon
While they do bounce on each other quite well, and their characters are quickly stablished as "grump" and "quirky", but still they felt kind of flat.
Unlike your other stories, I was in no point thinking to myself "I hope they get out of this one", or "This can't be! I don't want x character to lose!".
But then again, maybe I`m being unfair because I may be unconciously comparing this new one-shot characters to the stronger and more developed characters from Coco's Bizarre Adventure,
By the way, I like how each of your stories have different strenghts:
>CRBA for its ｢plot｣.
>Nothing's Kingdom for its ｢characters｣.
>BADventure for the ｢concepts and ideas｣.
It makes me wonder what the next story will be good at.
But until then, I'm eagerly waiting for the next Jojo Friday.
Keep getting better and better Ditherer!

man i swear i'll remember to write one of these fucking days i tell you hwut

I've finished part 3 now though so i think i understand the dynamic of stands.

>>29821760
hey has the 'battle of the newbies' ASB been passed and is in production? just wondering...

get ready for a pretty good write on my part though.

>>29821789
I think Omnee was working on it.
>yfw you remember when Phase 2 didn't know what an ASB was.
Time sure flies by.

https://pastebin.com/DNZ6FD9q
>You travel though a mess of rubble, and into a large hall, with colored glass upon the walls.
>You've had just walked through this area the night before.
>This leads toward, you think- not the elements…
>With a hint of understanding, you begin down the hallway.
>You begin speeding up-
"This leads- uh oh."
>You begin barreling down the hallway, realizing where you're heading.
>You see hoofsteps of mud from celestia and the others.
>But they stop almost 20 paces in.
>This means-
>"You're not alone, Jojo."
"Yeah, I know that."
>You turn towards the glass on your right.
>Upon it is a blue clad figure with stars on his robes.
>It's the court Wizard!
"Starswirl! What have you done with Celestia!"
>"Diminished her, why do you ask, Jojo?"
>He begins maniacally laughing.
>"Diminished! What an exquisite euphemism for killed! Don't you think!"
>He's bonkers.
>"So, you think you can pull miracles out of nowhere?"
>"Not with me! You can't!"
>You flex in anxiety.
>>>>>TO BE CONTINUED!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=77n1mDf6Iqo

>"So, you think you can pull miracles out of nowhere!?"
>"Not with me! You can't!"
>"HA HA HA!"
>Okay, think, how to get him out of the glass…
>"Ready to Die, Jojo!?"
"Sheesh, what a try-hard."
>POP!
>He's out the glass!
>Wait, no.
"I'M IN THE GLASS?"
>You look around in this strange world, everything having a slight purple tint to it, mirrored to the other world.
>"WELCOME TO MY WORLD, JOJO! NOW DIE LIKE YOUR PRINCESS!"
>You try to draw your shortsword.
>It's not there.>You simply grab a nearbly candlestick.
>He charges a magic charge at you.
>You get in a batter's stance.
>He casts, and you swing!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qKggnBh2Mdw

>>29822032
>Swing!
>And a MISS!>It went through the candle stick! And right into your body!
>"AHAAHAHA! YOU DITZ! I CANT BELIEVE YOU RIGHT NOW!"
>He poses.
>"THIS IS MY WORLD TO DO WHAT I WANT WITH!"
>You think for a moment.
>You're not too damaged from the conundrum so far.
>Your brain gages that you can take a few hits from him right now.
>Plan, plan, you need a plan.
"Alright. We'll do it your way."
>You gotta get at his horn.
>But that might be a problem.
>He's too crazy to-
>MAGIC BLAST.
>Dive left, Pose in order to intimidate.
>No use, he's too mad.
>You can't reform him, can you?
>Show him the light or something?
>The light…
>Noren? Can we use Noren energy?
>Last you checked, it's-
>Celestia's words echo through your mind.
>Noren energy is the power of goodwill, and is channeled through the beating of the heart!
>You channeled it, at the time of defeating Steelslight- through your shortsword.
>It was a form of steel.
>But Noren is magic, and should have power in this world!>You understand now.
>This world is-
>MAGIC BLAS-
"ACK!"
>You're tossed across the world, but you don’t feel any damage.
>Well, your heart-rate's up. You're gonna see just how much Noren you have in stock.
>This is…
>He's the most powerful wizard in all of Equestria.
>You just hope you're up to it.

>>29822088
>You get up, and ready yourself.
>The heart seems beating at about 180 BPM.
>Plenty of power.
>Now, You focus your power.
>You feel a surge of warmth.
>Oh my- is this what magic feels like?
"Nope, that's just a blast of magic."
>You look up at starswirl, his face twitching slightly.
>You're taking increasingly less and less damage.
>The Noren might be acting like a shield, but you don’t know.
>Focus!>Between you and starswirl is a mess of chairs and rubble, it's like he threw the kitchen in with the main atrium to make your battlefield.
>He's sitting atop a large boulder, firing relentlessly at you.
>The shots are now bouncing off of you almost entirely.
>But you fear that these are small, worthless shots in order to- originally-
>"AHAH! You've seemed to bring some sort of shield in with you! Sad that these are only weak foal's magic, just to make you suffer!"
>"TIME FOR THE REAL STUFF!"
>"AHHHAH!"
>He points his magic, and you barely dodge a thin beam, approx. 2 centimeters wide, cutting a large hole in-
>In everything.
>There's a hole across the battlefield approx. 2 centimeter's wide.
>You run close to him, but he pops off some sort of large Area of effect spell, blasting you away from him.>He then blasts himself up ontop another boulder, firing another round of very hazardous spells.
>This is bad, you need to hit him with something, and noren is only just keeping you alive longer.
>You can't channel it into anything worthwile, and it's not like this energy is ranged.
>Maybe if you could get it in-
>Into the boulder he's on.

>>29822151
>You run for that boulder.
>But he's quick, and hits you away.
>"C A N T Y O U S E E ? YOU'LL NEVER REACH ME!"
>You Continue fruitlessly dodging for a few minutes.
>He comes down off his boulder, ready to end this.
>He picks you up with his magic, trying to throw you, but your heart-rate increases, and you slip out of his grasp.
>You think you're immune to magic with Noren running through you.
>He's twitching even more.
>You were supposed to be dead twenty minutes ago.
>He's got to move on to more important things, you guess.
>Or maybe you're hurting his pride.
>He draws a blade, but you're too adept at swordplay to even let him glance you.
>Then, he drops the sword, while your heart drops.
>He begins picking up large boulders, hauling them at you.
>You're at the end of your rope.
>With a huff, you're caught in the side by one, and thrown across the room.

>>29822255
>In desperation, you simply pick up a rock and throw it at him.
>It goes through his head.
>He laughs some more, beginning to move toward you.
>But you realize something.
>You might just-
>You dive left, picking up as many rocks as possible.
>He recoils slightly, ready to pop an AOE in case you had charged him.
>You keep throwing them at him, picking him in his eye, his snout, through his horn, all over his head.
>He keeps laughing.
>You begin running with a crushed side.
>"You're done! You're entire side is crushed!"
>"Give up! This little journey is Over, JOJO!"
>"We have the elements, too- did you know that? Celestia is Dead! The elements are in posession of Nightmare Moon!"
>You keep throwing rocks.
>"You're so STUPID! I can't believe you Convinced Nightmare Moon to Come into her own! It must've been by accident!"
>Oh it was by accident, all right.
>But this action isn't.
>You throw a sling of stones at him.
>This time, they pass through his head, but he shrieks in pain anyways.
>"NANI!"
>He fell off the boulder he was on, recoiling in pain and terror.
>You run over, not before he tried charging an AOE to get you away.
>But before then- however, you threw a few more stones that kept him screaming in pain, too hurt to make spells.
>You get him in his horn, and you throw himself on him, charging him full of noren.
>You're heart feels like It's about to fall out of your chest.
>the world around you falls out around you and you're left where you began.

>>29822262
>You Get up, sharp pains in your side keeping you from posing.
"Alright, Starswirl. I'm gonna tell it to you straight."
>He looks up.
"You lost, you've lost because you got cocky and trusted your surroundings too much."
>You eye him.
"And as a talented Psychologist, I build up that mental connection with stones being thrown at your face being harmless."
"So when I filled them with Noren, turning them into batteries of Noren energy, you never saw it coming when you were hit with them, like bullets from a gun."
>You smile.
"The rocks might've gone through you, but the Noren didn't!"
>He looks pissed.
>"You'll never win! Nightmare moon will ressurrect Discord!"
"What are you under, some sort of spell?"
>"You'll never-"
>"You'll never-"
>He's twitching and repeating the same line.
>Sweet Celestia he might actually be under a spell.
>You fill him with all the Noren you can feel, maybe a bit of goodwill can break it.
>…
>You hear an audible 'CRACK' in him somewhere, and his eyes clear up dramatically.
>He looks at yourself, and smiles.
>"JOJO! It's you! I'm so happy! I have to warn you, it's Luna! She's gone rogue!"
"I know. Come on, we need to find Celestia."
>He eyes you.
>"You're hurt!"
"It's no problem, Starswirl, we need to find Celestia."

>>29822295
alright, that's it for this burst. we've got the enitire group together by my count with celestia SPOILER[ spoiler] wrapped in as much plot armor as one could fucking muster, but she's going to be worfed for a good while.

as the group goes right now it's Steelslight, JOJO, Lightning, Celestia, and Starswirl right now.

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>>29820993
I might return to it later, but I don't think I could manage a 26-part story around it like CRBA and Coco. For one thing, they wouldn't be hanging around portals all the time. Mostly BBBB's inspired by the Storm Sisters in Cat Armed Phenomena, and the idea was to make a really strong jumping-off point for a series that other people might be able to cannibalize. So if anyone else wants to run with these ideas or characters, they can feel free.

Writing CRBA and Coco simultaneously is almost necessary to me at this point. It keeps me shaken-up, so each time I start an episode I have to find the groove again.

>>29821070
I'm glad I seem to keep topping myself! As far as I'm concerned I've got some weirder directions and twists still upriver for both of my main stories. And I'm afraid the only Pendulum I've heard is Blood Sugar.

>>29821344
>someone reads my stories and thinks to themselves "This can't be! I don't want x character to lose!"
>mfw

Thanks for the critique. Characters have always been my weakest point as a writer, which is why fanfic is so appealing, and I still haven't grown a sense for when they work or fail yet. For example, I'm pretty surprised that you rated the Coco characters so highly. In this case, I wanted the heroes to be iconic and instantly understandable, but not to be entirely one-note. I wonder if the depth in the others comes from the fact that I don't fully understand them either.

>>29815254
>>29815257
>>29815259
Everyone sure is dedicated to bump this thread

>>29823136
Yep, super keen

>>29821789
I'm still working it out, but desu I'm a little burned out on fight scenes from the Jolyne ASB I posted last week. I've resumed work on my other stories though, so I might end up posting a lot in the upcoming weeks.

Finals are basically over for me with the exception of a few essays and one big project that I have to work on, so I've got some time to write.

>>29823325
What is more likely to come first? Kira in Horseland or the second day in Anon's Stando Adventure?

>>29823908
A good chunk of The Second Day is already completed, and since I only have an outline of the next part of KVH ready I'm probably going to post some more ASA soon.

I've been working on a story for Black Racers, which I totally shouldn't be, but the concept has just sucked me in.

Case in point, here's a nice little villain Stand:

STAND NAME: [HYDROGEN]
ABILITY: Allows the user to “combine” two things, no matter how different they are in composition. The Stand turns one object into light and “injects” it into another object, though the user can adjust how much of the process is light and how much is solid matter. For example, the user can combine a boulder and a living thing, resulting in a rock-like living creature, or perhaps the boulder takes the form of the creature and traps it within. The end result seems to be based on what the user wants out of this combination.

[BUMPNYMOUS]

>>29824403
[Bumpisphere]

>>29824837
You flatter me.

Hopefully by the time the new season finishes they will announce part 5 id love the two series to be just after eachother so we can use the other show to keep myself occupied for awhile.

>>29824837
[Timbump three]

I might post something in a bit. Just spilled water on my laptop's trackpad and had to disable it cause it started acting all funky.
If I do post, it's not gonna be Anon's Stando Adventure.

>>29826849
>[Black Racers] is coming...

>>29827194
This update's taking a little bit, but I'll be posting it before I go to sleep.

I probably shouldn't do this...

Here we go.

“An’ that’s how we defeated our sworn nemesis and her goons and restored peace to Equestria. The end.”
>Rainbow Dash, sitting across from you in the Ponyville spa’s lobby, looks at you with disbelief and disgust
>”Was it really that gross? I don’t remember it being that gross.”
“It was exactly that gross, no more, no less. You were there, remember?”
>”Well yeah, but-“
>At that moment, Pinkie Pie comes bounding in from outside, slamming the door onto the wall as she throws it open
>”Are you guys telling STORIES without me!? You know how much I love stories AJ!”
“Well Ah’m not sure what you want me to do about it Pinkie, ya just missed the end of it.”
>Her eyes bulge out of their sockets
>Uh oh, you know that look
>”Well you’d better be ready to tell it AGAIN! I wanna hear EVERY detail!”
>”Seriously Pinkie?”
“Pinkie, you were a part a’ all this! Why d’you wanna-“
>”BECAUSE! JUST TELL ME THE STORY!”
>”Yes darling, story time with Applejack sounds like a fine idea.”
>The rest of your friends file in behind Pinkie, all of them eager to soak in the spa
>”I-I wouldn’t mind hearing whatever this story is…”
>”I think it’d be a great idea too, Applejack! Let’s all sit down in the spa and listen to your tale!”
>Twilight looks down at Spike, who’s probably been dragged here against his will
>”Uh, sure. I wouldn’t mind hearing it, I guess.”
>These gals…
“It’s a tale y’all were part of, y’know. You were all there with me to experience it.”
>”WE KNOW ALREADY, JUST HURRY UP AND LET’S GO SO WE CAN HEAR THE STORY!”
>As if on cue, Lotus and Aloe open the door into the rest of the building and invite you all into the spa
>”Please follow us, we’ll get you situated so you can luxuriate in the best hot bath Ponyville has to offer.”
>They lead the 8 of you down several twisting corridors until you reach the best room in the building

>>29828099
>Dominated by a massive hot tub to soak in the heat and relieve the stress of the day, this is the place you come to when you have enough time away from the farm
>And it’s SO worth it
>As the girls file into the tub behind you and Spike takes a seat on the rim, swinging his feet in the warm water, you lean back and settle into the comfortable bottom of the tub
>And then something snakes its way up the inside of your throat
>You take a deep breath to get everyone’s attention on you, and then Anonymous’ hand bursts out of your mouth
>It’s got skin on it this time, thank Celestia, but the nails are missing so he didn’t scrape your esophagus on the way out
>How thoughtful
>A mouth opens up on the palm, complete with a full set of human teeth and a tongue, and the hand turns to face you
>”Do you wanna start or should I?”
>Dash, as usual, twitches uncomfortably before settling back down
>The rest just look a little happy
>”HEY ANON, HOW YOU BEEN?”
>”PRETTY GOOD PINKIE, HOW ‘BOUT YOURSELF?”
>”ME? I’M DOING GREAT, AND JUST THE OTHER DAY I WAS-“
>”AWESOME PINKIE BUT IT’S STORY TIME NOW SO SHHHHH!”
>Pinkie returns to a resting state, staring calmly at the hand sticking out of your mouth like a large green pool noodle
>Anon’s hand turns to you
>”You wanna start or should I?”
>With a thought you push the arm to the side, giving yourself enough room to speak with a large impediment
“Ah shink ‘at it oughta ‘e me who shars.”
>”Would you mind repeating that? I didn’t understand you the first time.”
>You level a glare at the hand; he knows darn well what you meant
>”Haha, just kidding. Alright ladies (and Spike) it’s story time.”
>Anon’s hand retracts into your throat, merging with your flesh to become part of your body again
“Phew. Alright, so it all started wayyyy back about 4 months ago, when we were given Stands by Princess Celestia to combat the wave a’ Stand users that had been popping up around Equestria…”

>>29828104
>4 MONTHS AGO
“So you will all be given the power to combat these “Stand users” that have been plaguing Equestria as of late. I am offering you this opportunity to back out now, because once you have Stands your future battles will be unavoidable.”
>You and the girls, along with Spike and Anonymous, were called to Canterlot on a matter of national security after a series of terrorist attacks on various cities around Equestria, including Baltimare, Manehatten, and even the Crystal Empire
>Through extreme pressure on her intelligence unit and a bit of luck, Princess Celestia was able to discover the existence of Stands, which were apparently like super-powered ghost bodyguards
>Anon said that he’d read about something similar in a comic book back on Earth, so you all copied the name over to the new threat
>A week ago, Celestia had figured out how to reverse engineer the magic that gave the terrorists their Stand powers, and had offered to apply that magic to the 8 of you
>Anon, Spike, and Rainbow had practically leapt at the opportunity to get superpowers, and the rest of the group wasn’t too far behind them
>Even Fluttershy was eager to help out however she could
>The only reticent one was Twilight
>She wasn’t really sure having a Stand would be a good or helpful thing
>But she’d accepted the offer like the rest of the group because she knew it’d help in the long run
>”Very well then. My little ponies, and dragon and human, thank you for serving your country.”
>Celestia had charged up a big beam of magic, and then you were out like a light

>>29828110
>Bwuh?
>Where are you?
>”Ah, she’s awake. Can you hear me? How are you feeling?”
>You’re in a hospital bed somewhere, probably in the castle, and there’s an earth pony nurse talking to you
“Uh, yeah, Ah’m okay. Just a little tired.”
>The nurse cracks a smile
>”Don’t know how you could be, you and your friends have been out for a day!”
>Your shocked look doesn’t even phase her, and she quickly moves to reassure you
>”It’s nothing to worry about. Getting knocked out for a day is an unfortunate side effect of Celestia’s Stand endowment spell. I’m going to run a few tests real quickly, alright? Tell me, can you see anything in this room besides the two of us?”
“Uh…”
>There’s some sort of heat haze behind her, like when you’d work the farm on hot summer days and see the air rippling over the hot roads, and it’s becoming a little more distinct the longer you stare at it
>She takes notice of your squinting and staring, and nods to herself
>”Alright, it seems like you can see my Stand, [Audio, Video, Disco]. How distinct is it? Some patients can see less than others when they first awaken.”
“It looks kinda like a mirage. Like the air is rippling behind ya.”
>She nods her head
>”Oh! I uh, completely forgot to introduce myself. I’m Blue Cross, and I’ll be your attending nurse for the duration of your stay here! In case you’re wondering where “here” is, don’t worry, it’ll be explained in a bit.”
>She bends her head to grab a pencil from her scrubs and jots something down on the clipboard at the foot of your bed
“What exactly does your Stand do?”
>Blue Cross stares at you with surprise
>…It’s making you a little uncomfortable
>”Oh, sorry. It’s just that nopony’s ever asked me that before. It’s a bit like a nurse; holds things for me mostly.”
“Celestia told us that each Stand has its own unique powers though, so what’s your power?”
>She glances down and away from you

>>29828119
>”I… It can heal any wound or injury at the cost of some of my lifespan. Small cuts and burns cost maybe half a minute, but larger stuff like broken legs or whole-body third-degree burns… That costs me years. My Stand tells me what everything costs before I pay for it, and it has a counter on the front that tells me how many years, months, weeks, days, hours, minutes, and seconds I have to live. I’ve already extrapolated the date of my own death from that information. In the process of helping others I’ve already shaved roughly 12 and a half years off of my life. It’s… really scary.”
>Blue Cross hangs her head, and you beckon her over
“C’mere.”
>She walks up to the bed, still downtrodden, and squeaks a little in surprise when you wrap your hooves around her
“It’s alright. Ah may not know how it feels to give up mah time like you have, but your heart’s in the right place, and Ah’m sure that if you could use your power forever you would. Yer a good pony sugarcube, Ah can tell.”
The nurse sniffles a little into your back before breaking the hug and giving you a small smile
>”Thank you, Applejack. It’s very nice to hear that from somepony.”
>She takes a moment to compose herself, inhaling and exhaling
>”Alright, let’s do a little more testing. I’m going to touch you with my Stand, and I want you to try and use your own to push it away. Ready?”
>You nod, uncertain, but her Stand is starting to take shape behind her
>A hoof with a red cross on the back, wing motifs running along its chest, and…
>That’s just weird
>A staff with snakes entwined around it for a head
>On its chest is a counter with each individual slot marked as years, months, weeks, and so on, just like she said
>The rest is still indistinct, but it’s slowly fading into view
>[Audio, Video, Disco] reaches out with its hoof and touches your shoulder, holding it there
>”Now I need you to concentrate, miss Applejack. Reach inside yourself for the new part of your soul, and draw it out.”

>>29828124
he heck’s that mean? New part of your soul?
>You close your eyes anyway, searching deep inside for “something new”
>And to your surprise, you find it
>There’s something that wasn’t here before
>Or maybe it was always here but you just didn’t know it
>It feels pretty familiar, kinda like an old friend
>So you reach out and try to touch it
>There’s a slight rustling in the room, but not the rustling of clothing
>More like the rustling of-
>Leaves?
>You open your eyes to see a tree branch sticking through your torso, swaying slightly in an invisible breeze
>Another branch is sprouting from your shoulder, wrapped gently around [Audio, Video, Disco]’s hoof
>The odd thing is that they look like palm trees but they have branches like an evergreen
>Blue Cross smiles at you from the foot of the bed
>”Well done, miss Applejack. This is your Stand.”
“Mah Stand?”
>She nods
>”Yep, this is the power that has manifested from your soul. Now you just need to figure out what it does.”
“How am Ah gonna do that?”
>”Well, when you’re feeling well enough to walk, we’ll begin training you to deal with threats, and as part of that training, you’ll be put through a series of tests that have a high chance of drawing out the latent power of your Stand, and giving us an idea of what you can do with it.”
>She slings the clipboard onto her back and turns to leave the room
>”For now though, you should rest. I’ll inform the princess that you’ve recovered enough to speak with her, and she’ll be in shortly. I’ll see you later, Miss Applejack.”
“Just Applejack is fine with me.”
>Blue Cross stops for a second, thinking it over
>”Alright then Applejack, I’ll see you later.”
>She gives you one last smile and closes the door, and you lay your head back on the pillow, staring at the tree growing out of your chest.
>A name echoes on the fringes of your consciousness
“[Miami Disco]?”
>That’s the last thing you hear before you fade out

>>29828131
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xAM6mG6BWjw
———————————————————
STAND NAME: [MIAMI DISCO]
STAND MASTER: APPLEJACK

POWER: D
SPEED: C
RANGE: B
DURABILITY: B
PRECISION: D
POTENTIAL: A

APPEARANCE: A palm tree that grows from Applejack’s body in the style of a standard evergreen tree, boughs, branches, and all.
ABILITY: We don’t know yet it’s a fukken tree lol
———————————————————

>”-ck?”
>What?
>”-plejack?”
>Is someone calling for you?
>”Applejack? Ah good, you’re finally awake.”
>Whoa nelly, it’s Princess Celestia
>She greets you with a smile like a warm spring day
>”Glad to see you’re up and aware my little pony. You’ve been asleep for about 3 hours.”
>Dang it, you wanted to be out and about right now
>”I can tell you’d rather be walking around the hospital wing, so why don’t we go take a look around. It’ll be good for you to stretch your legs anyway.”
>You throw the covers off without a second thought, leaping up to join the princess
>As you follow her out of your room, she turns to you
>”Why don’t we go see your friends? I think Anonymous and Twilight are in training right now, and we can see about sitting in on that. How does that sound?”
“Sounds good to me princess. I wanna see what my friends can do with their powers, maybe figure out what mine does while I watch.”
>”So you’ve already manifested your Stand? Good, that saves us a little time down the road. Come this way, the training hall is down here.”
>Celestia leads you out of your room and through a section of the castle you’ve never seen before. Along the way she makes light conversation
>”I am sorry that my spell knocked you out for a day. I had no idea there would be aftereffects based on the kind of magic it was.”
>You shrug
“Eh, what can ya do? What’s done is done and you didn’t know, so don’t worry about it. Ah’m just glad we all made it through in one piece. Ah’m assuming we did, anyway.”

>>29828139
>The princess covers her mouth with a hoof, hiding a grin
>”Well you might be surprised when you see Fluttershy, then. Her Stand is pretty bizarre, even compared to what I’ve seen so far.”
>Furrowing your brow, you ponder what princess Celestia just said
>As you ponder, the princess leads you towards a room where you can hear the distinct sounds of combat
>”Ah, we’re here. Prepare yourself for some really weird sights, Applejack.”
>Taking a deep breath, you nod
“Ah’m ready, princess.”
>Celestia opens the door with her magic and ushers you in ahead of her, and the first thing you notice isn’t the huge arena or the giant striped pony hovering behind Twilight, but the fact that there are big tumorous growths on every surface in the middle of the room
>Some of them have eyes, and as you walk farther into the room half of them turn to look at you
>Anonymous, without even turning to acknowledge your presence, waves over his shoulder
>”Hey AJ, finally awake? Glad to see ya.”
>”Applejack! You’re okay!”
>Though, Twilight’s got other ideas
>Breaking away from the battle, Twilight rushes over and engulfs you in a big crushing hug
>Freeing a hoof, you hug her right back
“Takes a lot more’n magic to keep me down Twi. Glad you’re alright too.”
>Anon walks over to you and the growths disappear from the room
>”I guess we’re done early then? How’s it going AJ? Manifest your Stand yet?”
>You focus for a second, then make a tree grow out of your back in response
“Yep! Thing is, Ah don’t know what it does yet. Was kinda hopin’ to find out when Ah got here.”
>He grins in response
>”Hell, I’d love to help with that. We could go right now if you wanted to. I’m sure me and my Stand [Paris] would be able to sort out what yours does in no time. I can scope out anything with the growths I make, including taste and smell.”
>When you scrunch your face in disgust, he rears back and laughs a booming belly laugh
>”Ah man, the look on your face is priceless. Wish I could take a picture.”

>>29828146
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jMoRL46x8F8
———————————————————
STAND NAME: [PARIS]
STAND MASTER: ANONYMOUS

POWER: E
SPEED: D
RANGE: A
DURABILITY: D
PRECISION: B
POTENTIAL: E

APPEARANCE: Takes the form of ethereal handprints that Anon can choose to leave behind on any surface he makes contact with, including his own body. After a minute, these handprints will grow globs of flesh in them that can grow any sensory organs Anon chooses. Each of these organs gives him real-time feedback and can allow him to spy on the battlefield from any direction in any location.
———————————————————

>As you walk towards the center of the arena with Anon, you turn to Twilight again
“Hey Twi, what’s your Stand do?”
>Before she has a chance to explain, a guardspony bursts through the door and runs up to Princess Celestia
>”Princess! We’ve just received a worrying report! You need to come with me to the war room immediately!”
>The princess’ face hardens
>”Very well, I’ll head there right away. You three enjoy yourselves for today. If you need a guide or information, track down any of the ponies working in this area. Have a good day!”
>With that odd and worrying exchange, Celestia walks out of the training room, leaving you standing between Anonymous and Twilight
>”C’mon AJ, I wanna see your Stand in action! Let’s go!”
>You trot to the center of the arena across from Anon, watching as he slaps his palms onto the floor and grins at you
>”We’re gonna start with something basic. I’ll throw a soft punch at you and you try to block it with your Stand, aight?”
>You nod assent and steel yourself, calling your Stand into existence around you
“[MIAMI DISCO]!”
>The boughs of the tree shield you from Anon’s first punch, but the second comes in from the right, smacking into your exposed side
>”Not bad AJ, not bad. It actually feels like I’m punching wood. But what can it really do?”

>>29828151
>Throwing another quick jab, Anon dashes to the side and tries to hit you in the leg
>You quickly grow another branch where he’s going to hit-
>And the far wall explodes into the room, showering all three of you with debris
>Three masked ponies, a unicorn, a pegasus, and an earth pony, step through the hole
>”You three, get down on your knees!”
>The pegasus commands you with a booming tone of authority, before pointing a crossbow at you
>”I SAID GET DOWN!”
>Anon looks Twilight in the eyes and nods before getting onto his knees and putting his hands behind his head
>You follow suit, but Twilight suddenly rushes towards the invaders!
>”[DEEP COVER]!”
>The striped pony from earlier shows up, rearing back for an attack, but as it collides with the unicorn its hoof and Twilight’s corresponding leg break!
>”AAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!”
>The earth pony smirks
>”This is the power of my Stand, [HELMETS]! Whatever I touch becomes invincible!”
>The pegasus advances on Twilight with the crossbow
>”Boss, what should I do? Take her down?”
>The unicorn shakes her head
>”No need for senseless loss of life. Knock her out. The other two are why we came here anyway.”
>”Gotcha.”
>The pegasus rears up and delivers a swift rabbit punch to Twilight’s forehead, laying her out on the ground
>Smiling, the unicorn and earth pony begin running towards you and Anon
>Crap, you can’t hit her or you’re gonna end up with broken limbs, and you probably can’t hit the earth pony either
>Anon, for his part, tries to lash out when they get within striking distance, but his arm breaks when it makes contact with the unicorn’s face, and she doesn’t even react
>”Well damn, I was hoping to do this the other way around, but you’re resistant, human. I’m going to have to break you of that trait.”
>The unicorn mare looks over to you and you swear you can see her smiling through her mask

>>29828162
>”Applejack, right? Element of Honesty, if I remember correctly. You’re gonna be my new experiment. Behold the power of my Stand, [HYDROGEN]!”
>A striated pony with multiplication and addition signs on its hooves appears from behind the unicorn, gilded lab coat blowing in the same unseen breeze as your trees
>It hits anon with the addition hoof multiple times, and you swear you hear bones cracking, but what happens next scares you beyond belief
>Anon’s body bursts into fragments of pure light
>The fragments spin up and hover around the unicorn, who quickly closes the distance and strikes you in your exposed side with the same hoof, and you float into the air
>The fragments begin to surge into you, at first one by one, then more and more, and then they stop being light and turn into something far more horrible
>Anon’s flesh and bones pierce directly into your body, invading your bloodstream and musculature
>The leaves on [MIAMI DISCO]’s branches begin to lose their color and fall off, creating a miniature autumn around your body
>You can feel his flesh entwine with yours, feel the snapping and crunching of rearranging bones, the squish and squelch of overlapping sinews, and hear the heightened pumping of your hearts together as one
>The scent of blood and bile overwhelms you, and even as the remains of Anon’s body are pushed into yours you lean over and vomit, nearly passing out on the floor
>The unicorn stands over you looking pretty damn pleased with herself
>”She’s not dead, that’s a start. I think it’s time to get the hell outta here. We got what we came for and Celestia’s likely to be here any second.”
>As she turns to leave, time seems to slow down
>Not one minute ago you were learning how to use your Stand effectively, and now you’re on the cusp of death with your friend seemingly used to torture you in his own death throes
>And there’s something new inside of you

>>29828169
>A rising hatred, an anguish you’ve never known
>Kill her
>Kill her
>KILL her
>What’re you standing around for Applejack just stand up
>STANDUP
>C’MON SHE’S GETTING AWAY
>Dammit
>DAMMIT
>She’s gonna get away and we’ll have no way to stop her
>SHE CAN’T ESCAPE SHE CAN’T
>GET OVER THERE AND FUCKING
>KILL
>HER
>You stand up
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9Tx8lphVLro
>The agony from an instant ago is gone, replaced by cold fury and pure hatred
>Kill her
>Unsteadily, you stumble forward, and end up almost leaping into her
>When did you get so fast?
>It’s the pegasus again
>He’s going to shoot you
>Let him try
>The bolt enters your leg, and you feel it snap in two before being pushed out through the skin
>As it clatters to the floor, you feel something twitching around in your stomach
>You open your mouth to vomit again
>I’m gonna kill them all AJ
>Make them bleed
>BLEED
>A hand completely lacking skin bursts forth from your mouth, extending out far beyond your body in a rubbery fashion, and grasps the pegasus by the face
>LET’S SEE HOW YOU LIKE THIS YOU BASTARD
>The hand throws him against the nearest wall, cracking it from the force of the impact
>He slumps there, embedded in the mountain rock
>One down, two more SHITSTAINS to go
>You turn to the unicorn and earth pony, sending the hand after the two of them
>The unicorn sidesteps the blow and summons her Stand, but before she has a chance to do anything the hand has already wrapped itself, snake-like, around the earth pony’s throat
>The hand drags the pony in front of you, using it like a shield
>Let’s see you break through this, bitch
>Why are you thinking like that?
>Anon, you’ve got to avenge Anon
>AVENGE
>The earth pony’s Stand manifests, a pair of hooves attached to the torso of a gem-encrusted stallion, and punches the arm
>It breaks immediately, a pain you feel deep in your stomach as the arm flops uselessly to the floor beside you

>>29828173
>It’s useless, he should just LIE DOWN AND DIE
>A second and third arm take shape from the flesh in your throat, breaking open your jaw to accommodate their bulk
>The pain is indescribable
>PAIN HELPS YOU FOCUS
>One arm slams its fist into the stallion’s head
>The other grabs him by the tail, flipping him over
>It raises the stallion above your head, swinging him around and around and launching him towards the unicorn
>They tumble head over hooves into a lump on the floor
>The collision doesn’t concuss either of them though, and in a flash they’re back on their feet and scrambling out of the wall
>The unicorn turns to you, Stand at the ready, and speaks
>”You’ve become a better experiment than I’d ever hoped you would be, Applejack. Give my regards to princess Celestia and get stronger for the next time we meet. Toodles!”
>Her horn sparks and they’re gone and GOD DAMNIT AJ WE HAD THEM WE COULD’VE DONE IT I NEVER GOT To… to…
>You slump over, arms retracting into your mouth, and fall onto your side
>Anon… Anon is dead and gone
>AJ, I’m sorry
>I’m so sorry
>As the darkness closes in once more, a name floats up from the abyss of your soul
“[Black Racers]…”
>The sound of hooves and the clanking of regalia echoes in your ears
>And then you’re gone

———————————————————
SPECIAL TYPE: FUSION STAND
FUSION STAND NAME: [BLACK RACERS]
STAND MASTER: APPLEJACK/ANONYMOUS

POWER: B
SPEED: D
RANGE: C
DURABILITY: E
PRECISION: E-C, DEPENDS ON USER
POTENTIAL: B

APPEARANCE: Whatever flesh constructs the user creates.
ABILITY: Allows the user to control their own flesh and bone. Though it sounds simple, the user can manifest their ability in all sorts of surprising ways. It even allows them to grow new body parts, though in a limited capacity. Perhaps it can be used to manifest a certain someone?
———————————————————

>>29828184
And there it is, my brand new idea that I probably shouldn't have posted because now I'll want to continue it.
Pastebin is right here: https://pastebin.com/UnBcMGhE

As always, let me know what you think.

Night lads.

>>29828184
thats pretty fuckin cool

>>29828243
Thanks senpai, glad you liked it

>>29828475
no thank you for typing such a masterpiece

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>>29828195
I can sympathize with you. I've had a handful of really great BBBB ideas in the last 24 hours.

I think there's a lot of progress here. The framing device would intrigue a new reader, especially if they had no prior info, there's no gap between the start of the story and the start of the plot, and the visceral inner monologue of the final rampage fits the music awesomely. The Stands are great and I'm excited to see more of them, and the faithful portrayal of Applejack only makes it all the more bizarre.

I can't give a solid critique because I'm not sure if anything I point out might be intentional. For example, it seems weird to me that the villains have broken into the royal palace just to perform one experiment and don't seem overly interested in harming the other Elements or doing any other damage.

Also, Blue Cross is a good idea for a character and a Stand, and you're a smarter man than I to have a healer in the cast, but I think her whole reveal was rushed, and that she could reasonably have Hippocratic excuses to be tight-lipped about the cost of her power. Not that the reveal should've happened ten thousand words later and caused tons of pathos, but I think it should've been more work to pull it out of her. Unless, of course, the idea is that Applejack just has that effect on people.

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>>29828195
You were right Omnee. You shouldn't have posted this story. Now I'm gonna need more!
Your Applejack is great. She really feels like the farm pony we all know and love. The intro for the story takes away a little bit of suspense, but it does great in making you understand the bizarre things that are about to happen. I like the fact that AJ is the one that begins telling the story, that way the reader knows for a fact that the story is true. Maybe in the future Anon will take over and give us some unreliable narration? We'll have to see for outselves.
As Ditherer said, the antagonists do not have clear motives or intentions yet, but they do seem like a strong threat.Why Twilight didn't attempt to use magic at all bothers me a bit, but in the end, this story isn't about her.
I really want to see where are you going to take this story. We sure do need more AJ in this here thread.

>>29828781
I think I'm gonna steal that idea about Applejack's power.

Also you're completely right, everything in this chapter is intentional. EVERYTHING.

I'm glad I've managed to improve the way I start stories. I hope to build up to a good pace with Anon's Stando Adventure, accelerating bit by bit until the story's going along at a good clip,
so watch out for the first bit of the second day,
coming soon.

>>29826351
｢Something for Bumping｣!

>>29830698
[Bump Racers]

I gotta say, writing Black Racers is giving me great ideas about where to take Anon's Stando Adventure.

Expect more exposition and self-discovery next time, and also more pones getting shanked by the Arrow.

>>29831210
[Bumping in The Church]

>>29832087
[Bump Entity Extraction]