Equestrian Family general #4

i just saw my fail in the firsth post
i did not remove some of the old tekst
again

Heres a prompt for you guys.
>Anon makes Twi pregnant.
>Twi births a centaur.
>Its a girl!
>Alls good until teenage rebellion hits.
>She escapes home and visits Tartarus to see Tirek.
>"It's not a phase, mom! Tirek, like, understands me and stuff!"
>Gets grounded.
>Sneaks out anyway.
>In moment of vulnerability, confusion and emotion, she lets Tirek fuck her.
>Turns out one time is all it takes.
>>Twist: Tirek embraces fatherhood and wants to rise child as his heir, to the objection of overprotective Anon and Twi.

>>29693032
sounds like a storry that would be cool

but as far as i go
i can hardly finish the ting i started
so i cant write it for you

here is the next part of my story
>you place the bowls on the table
>derpy sits next to her bowl and starts munching down on the oats
>as always she did not want to wait
>it would be nice if she waited once in a while
>you sit down and start eating your oats
>after a moment of silence (exept for the noms) derpy starts talking
>"mr whooves why are you so nice to me, all i do is mess things up and break things"
>"i feel like that i am a bad pony and that i cant do anything right"
>dumstruck by what she said you stop eating
>you look at her and say "derpy everypony needs a chanse for a normal live"
>"you might be a bit clumsy but it doesnt mean that you are bad"
>"when i saw you on the edge of town the only thing i saw was a pony who needed a house and a family"
>derpy looks at you (well she tries but one eye looks at the celing) and tries to say somthing
>no words come out only a small smile
>you wanted to stand up and give her a hug
>but bevore you can stand up she already has you embraced in a hug

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>you look at the clock still embraced in the hug
>and see that it is time to go to work
>you tell derpy to place the bowls in the sink
>and to get ready
>she takes her bag and hat (you wonder were the hat came from becaus it wassent on the coatrack)
>you tell her "good luck with the mail today, dont forget to come to sugercube corner at noon"
>as she flies out of the door she yells okey
>bevore you walk out you decide to take a peak in the lab to see if she has returned
>you walk to the lab and peek trough the door
>the lab is filled with a bunch of machines and devices
>but not the thing you wanted to see
>it has been 2 years ago that you were droped here by a blue box
>and the box still has not come back to get you
>slightly disapointed you walk back to the hallway closing the door behind you
>well time to do my job you think
>you walk out of the front door and you turn toward the townhall
>your job isnt hard but it has to be done (its turning hour glasses and winding the clock tower)

>as you walk into the townhall you are greated by major mare
>"hello mr hooves how are you today?"
>"and how is your adoptee"
>you reply "with me all is wel but derpy still is getting used to lving with other pony's"
>"any eventes planned today"
>the major replies "no sorry today is a easy day i assume you will spend your time at the clock tower?"
>you just nod and say "i will get my tools and then i will be off"
>afther ths fast talk you walk towards your office (not to get tools you keep those at the clock tower)
>you needed to get the todo list
>your office is in the back of the townhall
>it has a desk that stands in the middle of the room (you never use it) with a chair behind it
>there is a file cabinet on the right side of the door
>you open the cabinet and look trough the maintenens list of the clock
>not that long a bit of greese and a wind of the spring
>should be done bevore noon

>>29693544
Its an ok story.
Lots of little mistakes and misspellings.
Also, could you try capitalizing first letters in the sentence?

>>29694015
>ts of little mistakes and m
will do
and sorry for the misspellings (still dyslectic and dutch)

>when you enter the clocktower you sight "here we go again"
>you climb up the stair up into the internals of the clock
>the internals of the clocktower arent that big and most of the space is been taken by i clock mechanic that sits in the middle of the room
>next to it was a giant wheel that wound the spring (you feel like a hamster everyime you have to wind it)
>next to stairway was a small cabinet that holds some grease and your tools
>you pickup a grease pot and started to walk to the gears
>everything that looked dry got brushed with a light coat of grease
>after looking back an inspeckting the work you did you decide it is time to wind the spring
>you put the grease back were you found it and you step into the wheel
>after a 10 minute run you feel that the spring has been wound enough
>you step out of the wheel and walk to the stairs
>while you walk away you look at the clock
>mmmm 11.50
>you have to hurry to be on time to meet derpy

i am a bit distracted so my updates will be slow
ti bad beans isnt here

>When you walk into suger cube corner you see Pinkie behind the counter
>Apperently MR and MS Cake arent here
>You look at the table that stands to the left on the counter
>And your happy to see Derpy isnt here yet
>You walk up to Pinkie and ask for 2 blueberry muffins
>"That will be 2 bits please" Pinkie sais
>You pay the 2 bits (there is a secret pocket in the tie) and sit down at the table in wait of Derpy
>It only has been 5 minuter bevor Derpy walks in
>"Ah derpy there you are i already got muffins for us"
>She sits down at the table next to you
>You reach her the muffin that you prommised her that morning
>It is gone bevore it touches the table infront of her
>Even pinkie wonders how she does that

i still dont know were i am goeing with this storry
so i am just gonna randomly write stuff down

>>29692962
The fuck is beans at? The fuck are the writers at?

>>29696371
i dont know
i wish i could just call them

>>29682691
>1:06
>You stick your head inside the Mystery Machine’s backseat windows after motioning them to put it down.
“Ay, Rainbow child? Ya gotta a sec?”
>Rainbow Dash responds with a confused look of confusion.
>She is, no doubt, confused by this confusing approach you take.
>Yeah.
>Confusing, isn't it?
>Bweh heh.
>“Uh, whatcha need?”
“Your un...your help. We need your help. Yeah.”
>“Oh...Okay?”
>She slowly exits the car door, making her way through her adopted sisters clumsily.
>Dopey-ass bitch.
>She accidentally bumps her head on the way out but pretends it didn't happen.
>“So, like, what do you need my help with?”
>You close the door and tell Scooby to put the windows up.
>“I need your undies.”
>...Her face turns an unmistakable red.
>Her eyes, however, narrow as a happy smile extends across the width of her face.
>“R-really?” she asks giddily.
“Really. Here, c’mon. And don’t look at Twilight. I mean it. Don't. Not unless you two are comfortable with each other or whatever.”

Pastebin Updated
http://pastebin.com/6yzn7tfa

>>29696729
BEANS i am so happy you have returned
i could litterly hug and kiss you

>>29695425
>You just smile as you take a bite of your muffin
>Derpy looks at you and she just smiles
>You ask her if she wants another muffin
>Ofcourse she wants one so you slid her a bit
>When she walks of you sink in thought
>You think about the past and all things you have lost the enemies you made
>But you also think about the good times
>You never hear Derpy return
>She sees your absend stare and asks "What is wrong"
>You shake your head and just reply "Stuck in the past my dear nothing to worry about"
>Derpy shrugs and eats her muffin (somhow she manages to eat it slowly)
>You also continiu to eat your muffin
>After a short while Derpy looks at you and sais "I am glad you found me"
>Bevore you can reply she continius
>"I was just a filly when my dad passed away"
>"I still remember him becaus he was always nice to me, even when i did not decerve it"
>"My mother tried to take care of me but she just could not earn enough for us both"
>"So one day she took me to a nice home filled with other fillys"
>"And she told me to wait for her and that she would be back in a few days"
>You already have a suspicion were this is goeing but you did not dare to interupt her
>"The days became weeks and the weeks months"
>"And then i realized she would not come to get me"
>"So i ran away and after a while i found this town and i never left"
>You look at her but her face is blank as if it did not matter
>You tell her in a soft voice "Derpy have you ever tried looking for your mother?"
>She hangs her head "I have tried but i did not know were to start"
>"But it does not matter anymore you found me and gave me a place"
>"I got a new chance and i am happy"

>>29696821

>You let all that was said sink into your mind
>But bevore you can reply on it all
>Derpy sais "Sorry but i have to finish my rounds"
>"We can talk about this later if you want"
>You nod and derpy flies out of suger cube corner while waving to you
>Still sitting there dumbstuck from what you just heard
>After what seems like an hour (it was 10 minutes in reality) you also leave
>You now have a mission you need to find Derpy's mother
>You run to the one place were you know you can get awnsers Twilights castle
>After a quick knock on the door you find yourself face to face with a purple dragon Spike as he was called
>"Spike can you ask Twilight if she has time for me"
>The dragon waves you in and walks of into the depts of the castle
>The Foyer of the castle is a large room with a few benches and a red rug
>There are images of trees on the wall and the room is bigger on the inside then the castle looks on the outside
>This makes you grim becaus you also loved to hear people say that
>You hear a door opening and a purple alicorn walks up to you
>You bow you head for the prinsess
>She tells you to not do that and asks what the problem is
>You explain the whole story to her as you end your storry
>"I see myself more as a friend then a caretaker and it hurts me that she never had closure"
>Twilight looks at you and tells i cant promise anything but i will try to find out what i can
>She also sais that it could take a while
>You thank her and walk out of the door
>When you walk out of the door it is still light outside

>>29696729
>1:07
>You guide her to the back of the van, closing your eyes so you don’t see Twilight’s parts.
>“Don’t look at Twilight? Why wouldn’t I -- WHOA.”
>Twilight gasps, immediately covering herself as Rainbow’s eyes instantly land on Twilight, a snapshot of her nude “sister” forever capped in her mind.
>“Ah! Rainbow! Omigod, look away!”
>“...Um, oh. N-no, it’s okay, Twi. W-we’re like sisters, ya know?”
>“Dash…!”
>“No really, just...yeah. It’s not gay if we’re family...just sayin’...”
>There’s a pause.
>“...Okay...but no homo,” says Twilight timidly.
>“...Uh, yeah.”
>Rainbow sounds a bit unsure.
>What.
> “Look girls, you two need to hurry up before we lose anymore time, got it? Rainbow, go get your duffle bag and give Twilight your panties dammit,” you order, back facing the two girls.
>“Yes sir,” says Dash.
>Strange.
>She’s never sounded so obedient...

>>29696765
Nice to see you too. Sorry been inactive. Theater stuff. Still.

>>29697022
hey man i can give you writing tips n stuff (though i am still improving) if you wanna meet me either in the IRC we had before or a discord you make

>>29697099
i have the #EquestrianFamily rizon
i opened it a few days ago
i would love to have some tips

>>29697096
>1:10
>So Rainbow got her duffle bag out.
>She unzips it, revealing folded clothes lazily tossed inside, mess.
>Or at least you think so.
>That’s what Twilight described it as.
>You can’t really see because you promised not to look at Twilight when her lower-half is completely nude.
>The Rainbow one has gained her trust though…
>You don’t know if that’s a good thing.
>“You done yet, Dash?” asks Twilight, clearly impatient at Dash’s admittedly slow pace.
>“Nope,” she says simply.
>Twilight groans.
>“Oh, c’mon! I thought you were supposed to be fast! Instead, it’s taking you three minutes just to look for your own underwear!”
>“Lighten up, Twi! You know I wouldn’t keep ya waiting…”
>Dash doesn’t sound offended by the blow to her ego.
>That’s...different.
“...You girls find them yet?”
>“No!” they both shout in unison, almost too loudly.
>Jeesh.

>>29697364
Bump for embarrassed Dash

>>29697022

>You walk to the market
>And you get stuff for dinner
>A nice salade with peases of apple will do
>It is getting late the sun is already goeing down
>You start the walk home but on the way Spike call you
>You walk towards him wondering why he is calling you
>Spike tells you that Twilight allready has an awnser and that she realy needs to see you
>You follow Spike to the castle
>You enter the castle and are supprised Twilight is waiting for you
>"I have bad news" she tells you
>"I contacted the royal guard and I have a few things to tell"
>You wonder how it was possible for her to get a awnser in the few hours that you left her
>She continius to tell you what she found out, and then she asks if you needed help telling the news
>You shake your head and you explain that it would be better that you tell it her

this is a bit rushed becaus i am getting borred by this storry
i will finish it.

Made a public pastebin for the delinquent anon and his sisters
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Here's the new stuff;

>Another few hours go by before you hear the shuffling of feet through the halls.
>You check the time on your laptop, notiving that it's been a good 7 hours since you all came home.
>And to the best of your knowledge they haven't had anything to eat so far.
>Damn, they really took you seriously.
>Even though the footsteps you hear are intentionally muffled, the walls are too thin to hide someone walking past your door.
>The bathroom door opens shortly thereafter you hear the shower turn on.
>Yeah, they must be getting ready for school tomorrow.
>You decide not to leave your room and try talk to them, since you don't want to give them a lecture or anything.
>Fuck knows you're the least qualified person to be telling others how to live their life.
>As luck would have it, though, right after having that thought you hear a knock on your door.
>And then another.
>You turn to face the door, waiting.
>It creaks open ever so slightly, and all you can see is the side of Sonata's body as she peeks through to see if you're in.
"What?"
>There's a pause before she answers.
>"Can I - come in?"
>You just nod and turn your chair around to face her as she steps in and closes the door behind herself.
>More silence.
>You cross your arms and continue to be silent with her as she fidgets in place.
>She mustered up the courage to come in here, after all.
>What's the point if she doesn't say anything of her own accord.
>"We- I mean - I'm sorry."
>You sigh.
"For what, Sonata?"
>You say it more like a statement than a question.
>"For... you know."
>You almost roll your eyes at her.
>Locking eyes with her, you lean forward a bit and make sure you have her attention.
"No, Sonata. I don't know. You're not 10 years old anymore, you can't just say you're sorry and be absolved. Tell me exactly, in what universe could you justify what you were doing today?"

>>29698949
>She stops fidgeting and balls her fists up, becoming more defensive in her stance.
>"You don't get it, it wasn't our fault!"
"Yahuh."
>"It's- it was- we were just sitting outside at lunch when those bitc- I mean, when these girls - strolled up to us and poured their drinks all over Aria!"
>You raise an eyebrow, resting back into your chair.
>"Adagio and Aria were going to fight them right there, but I managed to calm them down because I said //you'd// be mad! But then after school when we were waiting for you they-"
>She cuts herself off, huffing and clenching her fists until her knuckles turn white.
>"P- point is, it wasn't our fault. Aria and Dagi feel bad about it as well, but I'd do it again if I had to! And I know you would too!"
>Tsk.
>You both look away from one another, the atmosphere in the room tense enough to cut with a pair of safety scissors.
>Sometimes you wish you knew a perfect do-no-wrong angel that had never been a delinquent so they could do all the moral lecturing.
>You feel like such a hypocrite when you try talk to your sisters about right and wrong.
>Sonata's in the right, here.
>If what she says is true, you'd absolutely have done the same thing.
>Probably worse.
>You sigh under your breath at her as Sonata looks down at her feet, waiting for some sort of reply.
>She's still tense and rigid, shaking from a mix of anger and fear.
>Truth be told Sonata was the last person you would expect to come in here and confront you about this issue.
>She's never been a fan of getting you angry like the other two.
>You uncross your arms, moving forward in your chair and beckoning Sonata over.
>Only daring to sneak a glance at you every few seconds or so, she stays her ground.
>You roll your eyes.
"Come 'ere."

>>29698960
>She slowly makes her way over to you, trying not to look weak or complacent.
>You've probably abused this tactic too much, but back when you were younger you'd always manage to end arguments with Sonata by sitting with her or brushing her hair for an hour or two.
>Somehow she always seemed to forget everything she was mad about after a while.
>Once she gets close enough to where you are, you roll forward the last few inches and pull her down off her feet.
>You sit her down on your lap and rest her over your chest, albeit while fighting a little bit of stubborn resistance.
>Thirty seconds of keeping her close to you calms her down at least slightly, and you feel her shoulders relax as well as her hands un-clenching.
"I never thought you girls were at fault here, Sonata. I'll never assume the worst about anything you three ever do, you know that. I just get so scared when I see you..."
>You breathe heavy, running a hand through Sonata's hair.
"When I see you act like I did back then. It's a hard life to get out of once you're in it, believe me. I'm not gonna tell you I know a better way of handling that situation 'cause I don't, but just try keep yourself out of trouble."
>You feel her nod ever so slightly on your chest as she brings her feet up from the floor and tucks them into your lap, curling up into a ball.
"Actually scratch that, you're fine. Just remember to keep your sisters out of it."
>You share a quiet laugh between yourselves and time goes by without another word.
>Leaning back into your chair one last time the two of you sit in the dim yellow light of your desk lamp for maybe an hour before you snap yourself out of it.
>Almost dozed off, there.
>Blinking furiously to get your eyes open, you crane your neck downwards at the girl on your chest to find her further into sleeping than you were.
>You pat her on the arm a couple times to try wake her but it takes a few shakes before she registers anything.

>>29698975
>She just about manages to mumble out a few words.
>"Mmh- I'm awake."
>Her eyes stay closed and her head buries itself further into your shirt, clearly not agreeing with what she's saying.
>You pry her away from you, pushing her feet off your lap and helping her stand and walk out of your room.
>She leans on you for support most of the way out, but once you get to your door she seems to be lucid enough to make it on her own.
"I'll see you all in the morning. It's late and you all have school, so staying up any longer wouldn't do anyone much good. Oh, make sure to tell your sisters I'm not mad, too. Don't need breakfast to be awkward."
>The still groggy Sonata can just barely acknowledge what you said as she rocks back and forth in her stupor.
>Almost instinctively, you lean down and give her a peck on the top of her head as a goodnight, something you're sure you haven't done in at least 5 years.
>As your lips make contact with her head Sonata jumps a bit and bumps your nose, tensing up all over again.
>You breathe in through your teeth slightly at the stinging pain, trying to force yourself to not sneeze.
>"Ah - abuh buh buh."
>She's got her eyes wide open now, darting them from side to side rapidly.
>She steals glances at you for about 5 seconds, just standing there, before rapidly jogging down the hall and exlaiming "Good night!" once she's back in her room with Aria.
>And then you sneeze.
>You stand in your room a moment after closing your own door, ultimately deciding to turn in early for the night.
>Hopefully tomorrow won't be half as stressful as today.
>You turn off your desklamp and fall down onto your bed, rolling yourself into the covers like a burrito before falling asleep.
>
>
>...
>You're awake.
>Huh.
>No, like, you're awake without being woken up.
>You're awake //before// being forced out of bed by your sisters.
>That's not normal.
>That's never happened before.
>Why are you so not sleepy right now?

>>29698981
>You have to check your phone, what's the ti-
>It's 11AM.
>FUCK.
>You leap out of your bed, flinging your covers across the room and pivot to bolt out your door.
>No one in the kitchen or living room.
>Did no one manage to wake up this morning!?
>You slam open Adagio's room door to find-
>Nothing.
>What?
>Sonata and Aria... also nothing.
>Huh.
>So they did go to school?
>How did they get there?
>You check your phone again, and now that you scroll through your notifications you finally see the text they left behind.
>So they got a ride, huh.
>A small part of you is dissapointed.
>Not that you didn't drive them to school, really.
>You've begged them some days to not force you awake.
>You're usually more than happy for them to get rides.
>But today you were gonna talk about the incident on the way there... hopefully get stuff patched out.
>Looks like they didn't wanna talk about it.
>You sigh.
>Not much you can do about it now.
>You make yourself some breakfast and had back to your room, opening your blinds to let some light in.
>Your computer boots up and you get to work, relishing the quiet hours you have to yourself before your sisters get back home.
>Why is your phone ringing?
>...
>It's the school.
>Joy.
>Did they find out your sisters did the thing yesterday?
>No, they couldn't have.
>They aren't that good.
>What the hell is this about?
>You pick up.
"Yeah, hello?"
>["Good Morning sir, am I correct in saying you're the parental guardian of Aria Blaze?"]
>Parental?
"Well, n- yes. Yes, I am."
>Can't be bothered to correct them.
>["Right. Pardon me for calling you in the middle of the day, but would it be possible for you to come to the school soon?"]
>What.
"Excuse me?"

>>29698989
>["Aria has been... excused from class for the rest of the day. The principal will have you in their office to explain and there will be an email sent to you, but as it stands Aria needs to be escorted home."]
"Excused? Escorte- what? Wait wh- fine. You know what, fine. I'll be there. I'll be there in 30 minutes."
>["Thank you sir. She'll be in the front office when you arrive."]
"Alright, thanks. Bye."
>You toss your phone onto the couch, pinching the bridge of your nose with your other hand.
>What the hell, Aria?

Tell me about shitty grammar and typos if ya find em, I'll fix it in the paste. Sorry if there are a ton, I'm writing this at 7AM with no sleep.
INCESTUOUS THOUGHTS INBOUND

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>>29698999
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>>29698981
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>>29698949
HA HA I POSTED THIS IN THE ENTIRELY WRONG THREAD.
FUCK ME SIDEWAYS, LADS. IGNORE ME.

>>29699010
i dont mind
it might not be pony but
it was family
so dont sweat it

>>29699010
It's no problem, friend. Good luck.

>>29697364
>1:11
>Suddenly, there’s a quick flash of light.
>Click!
>“Huh? Rainbow, what was that?” asks Twilight, presumably still bent over as she searchs for a pair of panties…
>“Rainbow chuckles.
>“What was what?”
“...Rainbow, what did you do?”
>“...Nothing.”
“Rainbow…”
>“Really, nothing!”
“...Before we get back in the car, you and I need to talk.”
>Rainbow sighs.
>“Ugh. Okay…”
>Then, an excited gasps...
>“Oh my Gosh...I got it!” cheers Twilight. “Finally!”
“You mean underwear? So you can finally put on some clothes for Godzilla’s sake?”
>“Uh-huh! Guess so.”
>Dash clears her throat.
>“Ahem?”
>...
>“What?” asks Twilight.
>Another small silence.
>Twilight groans in defeat.
>“Okay...fine. Thank you, Rainbow.”
>“No problem, Twi,” Dash responds cockily.
>A few moments later, and Twilight’s finally clothed, and you’ve turned to face her again.
“So are you good?”
>“I think so. Um, thanks for being so patient with me, Mister Anon,” says Twilight gratefully.
>You sigh in the jaded manner only a single father of five adopted highschool teengers in a band with two talking dogs can…
“It’s okay, Twilight. Glad you’re not covered in Spike’s piss anymore.”
>She briefly hugs you, arms around your waist.
>You pat her shoulder.
>She hops back into the car.
>...
>Your eyes land upon Rainbow.

>>29698569
>With a heavy head you leave and walk home
>As you walk home you realize that the sun is starting to set
>The news hat taken a lot longer then you thought
>Looking at your house you see that the lights are on
>You hope that Derpy had a good day
>You yell i am home once you enter your home
>You see derpy in the living room with a book
>She waves at you when you looked at her
>"I am gonna start dinner if you dont mind"
>You walk towards the kitchen
>Your happy you bought stuff for a salade
>You take a bowl and choppingboard from the cupboard
>You pick a knife from the drawer
>You cut the lettece and wash it after this you place it in the bowl
>Next you peel the apples and cut them into chunks
>You sprinkle a bit of olive oil over the salade followed by a hoove of croûtons
>You place the bowl and 2 plates on the table
>You call Derpy and you sit down
>She walks in and sits next to you at the table
>You split the salade between your plates

If you raised one of the mane 6, would they turn out like they'd be in the show, or be different?

>>29700981
its your story
you can make it as you like

>>29700981
Now, thats hella difficult question to answer.
Earth, Equestria or EQG?
Either way I would do my absolute best to rise them to be a good beings.
I would try doing so naturally, without forcing them into the mold of show characters.

bump
i wont be able to write

bumperino

>>29700981
Most likely they'd end up differently.If you take AJ for instance her southern drawl is a culture thing. If she never grows up around it she would never learn it and thus her entire background would change.

>>29702591

ay where da green at

Another bump

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Night bump

>>29705390
It's 08.00
So morning bump

I'm probably gonna start a second story for this thread soon. It will take a back seat to my spg story, but it's something I feel I want to do.

>>29705627
Oh this pleases me so much

>>29705627
Fuck yiss.

>>29705412
Im gonna bump you up, man

>>29706090
Bumping back

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Family with best pone go!

>>29707472
that picture is freaking cute

>>29699841
>1:12
“So Rainbow...are you sure you didn’t hear that noise? Maybe a tiny flash?”
>She starts to perspire around the back of her neck, her uneasy smile attempts to mask her poorly hidden fear.
>“I don’t know what noise you’re talking about, Mister Anon. You must be getting old or something…”
>You’re thirty-two.
“Dash, let me see your phone,” you order her with a warning edge in your tone.
>“What? Why?”
“It doesn’t matter why, I’m your parent,” you tell her, voice stern and authoritative, “now and it over.”
>Her brow becomes slick with sweat.
>“It’s dead,” lies Rainbow Dash. “It, uh, died at the restaurant.”
“Then there’s no reason you should refuse to hand it over to me.”
>“Well, i-it’s….ugh, this is pointless! Why’re we even doing this.”
“I already told you, Dash: it doesn’t matter why, I’m the parent, you’re the child.”
>“But there’s no reason for it!”
“I have a reason though,” you tell her, “now give.”
>“No.”
“Yes.”
>“No!”
“Yes.”
>“NO!”
>Suddenly, an idea hatches.
“...No.”
>“Yes!”
“No.”
>“Yes!”
“Well, I said no. I’m the parent, and I say you don’t give me your phone.”
>“Fine, you know what!? Take it anyways! Ugh!”
>She thrusts her arm out towards you, her phone in hand.
“Thank you,” you say with a pleasant smile.
>It’s at the very instant that Rainbow Dash realizes her mistake…
>“Oh…FUCK”

>>29708219
duck season rabit seaon rabit seaon duck season
LOVE THAT JOKE

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>>29708219
>now and it over
Other than this good update!

>>29708219
he learned that trick from Pinkie

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I am gonna get a little in tonight while I have a chance, just to whet your appetites.

>It’s such a wonderful thing to be surrounded by friends and loved ones is it not?
>This is, however, not true for everypony. Some of us can be surrounded by others and still be all alone.
>The struggle is different for all of us, but more so for those of us who are ‘different’.
>You are Derpy Hooves. A mare who has seen nothing but the cruel injustices of a world that judges others on their appearance alone.
>You were born with a rare condition doctors call Wall eyed syndrome.
>Your family lived in a small town called Hoofdale, a little mineral town that that mostly exports granite and gems throughout Equestria.
>Your dad, Jack hammer, was an earth pony who would break apart large rock formations for the gems inside.
>Meanwhile your mother, Silver Tongue, was a merchant who sold the gems jack gathered.
>As such, she had to protect her status as a reputable merchant if she wanted her business to keep growing.
>It wasn’t until you had to go to grade school that you would see what it’s like to be truly different.
>”Class, we have a new student today. Please welcome Derpy Hooves.”
>It was nerve wracking to stand in front of a class to introduce yourself.
“H-hi everypony, it’s umm nice to meet you.”
>”Look at her eyes! How stupid looking!” The class howled in laughter, not caring about the pony whose feeling they had hurt.
>”Cheerilee! You will stay after school for detention today!”
>”But Ms. Edify!” Cheerilee was cut off quickly by her teacher.
>“No buts! As for the rest of you, I don’t want to hear another word about this.”
>”You can take any seat that’s open at the moment sweetie.” She motions you to sit.
>You take a quick look around the class searching for the first empty seat, much to your dismay the only empty one was next to Cheerilee.
>”Now if you will open your books to page three we can start reading our story!”


Starting a story is always the hardest part for me....

>>29710797
guh sorry to have to say this but i have work in 5 hours for 12 hours so i will see you all later possibly with more derpy update that leads into her being a little older

>>29711222
We'll be right here. Don't ya worry.

>>29710797
This is an great start of a story

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>>29710797
derpy is good pone

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Derpy shouldn't have to struggle :(

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Hmm. Hmm.

>>29713681
10/10 would do

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If I write tonight it will be much later I've been 42 hours no sleep and my bed never looked so good.

>>29708219
>1:13
“Mhm, yes, 'fuck' indeed my young rainbow daughter. Password, please?”
>Rainbow scoffs.
>“Like Hell I’m gonna tell you.”
“That’s alright, you can just be grounded for a week instead.”
>She grumbles.
>“Okay, okay… it’s 1234.”
>You look at her with a raised brow.
>Is she for fuckin' real right now?
>Godzilla dammit, you though you raised her better than this.
>To say you’re unimpressed is an understatement.
“Yo, are you serious?”
>“Shut up. I was gonna change it.”
“Sure, probably about five months ago til you got distracted by something colorful, I bet.”
>“It’s faster to type, okay? I’m all about fast.”
“Fast ain’t always good. Better to be conscientious of how ‘fast’ you are next time, faggot.”
>You type the password twice: the first time you accidentally pressed the ‘2’ button two extra times, the second attempt you did it right, though.
>With her phone unlocked, you’re greeted with the sight of her home screen.
>The background is a picture of her soccer team.
>D'aw, team spirit.
>What a fucking dork.
>You look at her battery's bar.
“Hey, looky here! Seems like you’re at a good 46%,” you remark. “Seems pretty far from being ‘dead’ to me, Dashie, unlike you!”
>“Don’t call me Dashie...”
“Girl, I’ll do what I Godzilla-damn please. Now let’s see what’s in your pictures.”
>Her face goes paler than the un-tanned portion of a fat man’s ass.
>“Mister Anon, please, I don’t think you should…”
“Oops. Finger slipped. In photos now aaaand…OH. OH HO SHIT.”
>Your eyes land on the most recently taken picture.
>Your jaw drops.
>Your winky rises.

>>29715334
Rainbow girl fucking dies, green man's winky fucking rises

>>29700707
also an update from me

>You both eat dinner
>Derpy seems te enjoy her meal
>You cant enjoy yours
>It feels like your stomage is filled with rocks
>It remains silent for to long
>Derpy is the one who breaks the silence
>"Doc whats wrong, you never are this silent"
>You look at her worried "Derpy we need to talk"
>Derpy looks up from her plate
>Slightly slanting her head wondering what you meant
>As you look into her eye (the other eye looks at the celing)

>>29715334
Beans, what the fuck are you writing?

Also hi.

>>29715715
The worst green ever. It's just craziness.

http://pastebin.com/6yzn7tfa

>>29715715
art
its freaking art

>>29715806
I must work in less than 8 hr. I'm gonna give you a run after I work and not die.

>>29715823
Sounds good to me.

Also, hi, fags!

>>29715806
i still call it art

>>29715697
>You start talking "Derpy i went by Twilight today becaus i wanted to know about your past"
>"It only took a few hours to get a awnser what happened"
>"Celestia knew what happend to your mother"
>"But What I Found out is not what i wanted to hear"
>"The day your mother brought you to the orphanage was with a reason"
>"She had an audition with Celestia about a job in Fillydelphia, I never found out what the job was"
>"The audition went wel but she collapsed on the way out"
>"She never made the hospital, even Celestia could not help her"
>"The caus of dead was later determent to be a brain hemorrhages"
>"A few days later she was burried, Celestia organized everything herself"
>"They never knew she had a kid, so the orphanage was never warned"
>Derpy started crieing by the new you just told
>You gave her a hug to confort her but you knew it would not help much
>As you sat there in embraced in a hug, you continiut
>"Celectia also asked if you were able to pay here a visit"
>"She realy wants to appologize to you, and also show you were your mothers final resting place it"
>Derpy breaks the hug and looks at you with teared eyes she tells you this
>"I would like that, my whole live I wondered what happened to my mom"
>"This might be a good way to give me closure"
>You just nod and you tell her "Derpy i will ask Twilight to get you an appointment"
>You both decide to make it early night and leave the plates as a problem for tomorrow

>>29715060
Hmm, are there any greens or fics of Anon and Lyra having a secret love life? And then maybe accidentally make a baby?

>>29715971
>Two Weeks after your talk with Derpy
>You went to see Celestia
>Celestia spoke with kind words
>"Dear Derpy, I am so sorry"
>"If I only knew Golden Hearth had a daughter"
>"I would have done things diverently"
>"I would have made sure they found you a good home"
>"And you whould have gotten the chance to say goodbye"
>Derpy started crying again
>She just lookd at Celestia and said "Dear Celestia, thank you so much"
>"It means so much for me to hear she was treated so wel in the end"
>"I am sad i could not have been there, but you could not have know"
>Bevore she could say another thing Celestia embraced her in a hug
>Celestia turned towards you "Derpy is lucky that you took her in"
>"Nopony is supposed to be allone, and it seems that you have been the family see needed"
>after a short while Derpy broke the hug
>Her eyes still wet from the tears
>Celestia finaly spoke "Derpy if you follow me I will bring you to your mother"
>You followd them into the garden, walking toward a lonely tree on the edge
>Under the tree is a small tumbstone
>"Here lies Golden Hearth"
>"She died way to young"
>And below that a date
>Derpy walked towards it
>You and Celestia stood back to give some time
>"Why was she so importent to you that she got a place in the garden"
>You ask Celestia
>She look at you "It is Becaus I could not save her, and I didnt want her to be forgotten"
>You nod and thank her
>You turn back to Derpy
>One hoove on the tombestone, crying
>You hear her talk "Mom i miss you so much, I wish I could hug you one last time"
>"Tell you how much I Loved you"
>"But I cant turn back time, am I glad i got here in the end"
>"Mom I will come back to visit you again"
>She starts to walk toward you and Celestia
>She embraces you in a hug and tells
>"Thank you for helping me find the truth"

The End

>>29716340
my pastebin has been updated
http://pastebin.com/xabcPkL6
The story might be bad
but i am realy glad with the ending

Save bump

>>29715334
Where are you taking this madness, Beans?

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>>29715334
>“Fast ain’t always good. Better to be conscientious of how ‘fast’ you are next time, faggot.”
I don't know why this is so funny to me given what site we are on, but damn it I spit out my drink when I read that.

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>>29718086
It's because of the way he makes Anon say it. It's so uncalled for. He didn't have to go and call her faggot but he did. Then he himself ironically types the password too fast and has to do it twice.

We are witnessing is unbridled comedic genius, my dear friend.

>>29710797
>Thanks to your eyes reading was difficult for you, so you hoped she would not call you to read anything.
>”Now why don’t we let our new student read first?”
>You gulped and looked down at the page, even with the big letters it was difficult for you to put them together quickly.
“T-the l-little puh-piggy…”
>The class started whispering to each other as you struggled to read even a few words.
>”Ahem!” With one word Ms. Edify silenced the class. “Please Derpy continue, you are doing just fine.”
>After a few torturous minutes of working through the words Ms. Edify called on a different pony.
>Once class had finally ended the other fillies and colts formed into their little cliques.
>”Oh Derpy could you stay here for a moment?” Ms. Edify waved you over to her desk.
>”I think somepony wants to apologize for her behavior this morning.”
>”I’m sorry” Cheerilee grumbled, clearly not sincere with her words.
>”Also Derpy if you need help with reading feel free to ask me! It’s quite all right for a little filly your age to have some trouble.”
“Okay!” You felt better knowing that your teacher didn’t mind the stuttering
>A few years passed, but you remained alone. It seemed no pony wanted to be friends with Captain stutters for fear of being ridiculed themselves.
>”Oh l-l-look It’s d-d-derpy!” Cheerilee would torment you relentlessly.
>You would think that somepony as popular as herself wouldn’t need to be a bully, that they could just go one day without saying something.
>After all the years of teasing you weren’t going to give them the satisfaction of seeing you hurt.
>Behind closed doors that wasn’t the case, nopony could be treated like less than dirt and not react at all.
>Before you knew it Cheerilee and her friends made a circle around you. Flag twirler and Summer breeze were no more than lackeys.

>>29718579
I don't think this will be a terribly long story, but hey who knows.
Pastebin for Struggles
http://pastebin.com/uj0UZYyE

>>29718215
>that filename
my sides

>>29718713
Metsu, don't act like you like your stories long.
You sssslut.

>>29720250
Yea I guess my last story wasn't long compared to other greens lol.

>>29720518
Don't worry, man. It's not the size of the story that counts. It's the flow.

>>29720535
Yeah flow isn't my strong suit, but I think I'm improving a bit.

>>29720888
Pretty sure he was making a dick joke Metsu...

>>29715334
>1:14
>Rainbow Dash hangs her head in shame, knowing the battle is lost.
>You just can’t help but stare at the picture, though.
>A mix of feelings surge at this: anger at Rainbow Dash’s perversion taking the best of her, uncertainty on what to tell Twilight, guilty because promised to make sure Twilight was not seen nude or taken pictures of, and a big swirling cyclone of shame and arousal.
>The picture, as you are probably aware of now, is none other than that of Twilight Sparkle, bending over as she searches through the dufflebag of Rainbow Dash to find some panties.
>Her rear is fully exposed to the camera, dead on in the center, completely open like a blooming flower as your young adopted daughter’s ripe cunt and puckered asshole stare right at the camera’s lens as if looking at you hungrily.
>The mauve skin of Twilight darkens near her private areas, and the shape of her rear is incredible.
>Your member grows stiff.
>You’re tempted to send it for yourself, but, being the good adoptive father you’re supposed to, you sigh and delete it.
“...Rainbow Dash…”
>She says nothing, too ashamed and too embarrassed to speak.
“Rainbow Dash, why did you take this picture?”
>She murmurs something inaudible.
“Could you repeat that?”
>“...I said: ‘I thought she looked good’.”
>You don’t know what to do, so you puff out yet another sigh.

>>29721280
Well fuck can't blame ya there dash!

>>29721280
>1:15
“Were you going to send this to someone?”
>“What? N-no!” she says, cheeks scorching red. “No, I wasn’t do that! Honestly!”
“Okay, then why did you take that picture? And without her knowing, no less!”
>She struggles to keep her eyes on you.
>It’d be a lie if you were to say you weren’t having the same problem.
>“Because I...y’know…”
“...I see.”
>...Again, you don’t know what to say or do.
>Another sigh.
“...What am I supposed to do about this? Tell her you broke her trust and snapped a picture of her privates in all her glory!?”
>Dash’s eyes widen with a fearful gasp.
>“What? No! Please, y-you can’t do that! S-she’d hate me forever!”
“Well, what would you do if you were me, huh?”
>She doesn’t answer.
“Rainbow. What. Would you do. If you were me?”
>“I...I…would...um...”
“Well? You ‘would um’ what?”
>She puffs out a large breath.
>“...I-I dunno! Look, I’ll do anything for you not to tell her!” she cries. “ANYTHING!”

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>>29721980
Anything huh? I like where this is going!

>>29720250
>http://pastebin.com/iKQ8R5sp
Hey, fucker, your shit is fucking hilarious. I love it.

>>29721980
should i write more or should i stop
i might have some ideas

>>29722904
Write more.

>>29722904
if this is beans then you cant stop there!

>>29722904
Keep it up, friend.

>>29723901
Nah.

>>29721980
>1:16
“Anything?” you ask her.
>“Anything,” repeats Dash more slowly, her wine-colored eyes speak sincerely of how true her desperation is.
>She means ANYTHING…
>Literally.
>Anything.
>The thoughts you’d imagine cross through your mind, you won’t deny that…
>But that’d make you as bad as her, taking advantage of someone.
>You semi-reluctantly refuse to bargain with her.
“No. This was your mistake, you’re going to have to live up to it…”
>You sigh.
“But not now. I need you all to function at the band battle tonight. For now, I’m taking your phone away. For a month.”
>She doesn't argue back.
“But after this is all over, I want you to apologize to Twilight, okay? Then, I’ll consider giving your phone back. Are we clear.”
>She nods weakly.
>“I’m sorry,” she says pitifully, giving you a sad hug.
>Despite being upset with her, you can only hug her back.
“I’m not the one you need to apologize to. Now get in the car. We got to hit the road.”

>>29724017
>Beans cockblocks the readers of yet another one of his greens
why?

>>29721280
my pee pee is happy with this

>>29721980
Oh, it's like donating to the church

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The OP pic reminded me that I have a shorty I wrote about Adagio being Anons daughterfu, it ain't much and I don't even remember what the prompt was for it but as soon as I saw this thread it reminded me I had this. I haven't even read much of what's going on in this thread so sorry if it's a bit of a bummer

~~

>"You make me feel so constricted in this house! You never let me out with friends, you never take into consideration on how I feel, and you always cling to me when you have your drunk episodes! I can't take it anymore!"
>You clung to your whiskey bottle like a baby while trying to reach out to your only daughter
A-adagio, please wai-
>"No! I don't wanna hear it! I've had it with your attitude and- well, MAYBE MOM WOULD STILL BE HERE IF YOU KNEW HOW TO BE A PARENT!"
>After saying this, Adagio quickly put her hand over her mouth with a surprised expression
>Her heavy words brought you down to your knees, tears streaming down your face
>With such a rush of emotions, Adagio could let out the only words that she could think of
>"UGH, I HATE YOU!"
>Adagios words formed into a knife and drove itself straight into your chest
>At least, that's what it felt like to you right now
>And with that, the door slammed shut
>You stared at the door for hours with a worn and broken expression dripping from your face
>The only actions that come to your mind are to take a swig from your bottle, smash up the entire place, or go after her
>But her words seemed to have nailed you to the floor
>It felt impossible to stand on your feet
>All you could do and really felt like doing was cry
>And that's what you did, the bottle slipping from your hand onto the floor
>You curl up into a ball and sob to yourself
>Memories come flooding in
>You and Adagio reading stories with her on your lap
>Watching old movies together with her crying into your shoulder when the sad parts came
>You telling her everything would be alright
>The first time she called you...
>Daddy...

>>29725199

>What was that thing you used to say to her right before bed when she was a child?
>Oh yeah
I'm gonna protect my little girl...
>You bring a hand up to your head
Nothing will ever harm her...
>You drift closer and closer into sleep
You'll be safe with me...
>Slowly, your red, tear stained eyes close shut
My dear sweet little Adagio...
~

>The morning sun came through the window
>It shone right into your face
>You open your eyes slowly
>What happened last night?
>Oh.
>Adagio...
>Your only daughter, the only one you loved in your life, walked out last night
>I HATE YOU
>Her last words before she stormed out
>Fuck...
>What else did she say?
>She talked about her mother
>You stretched your muscles and pulled yourself up from the ground
>You wish you could tell her the truth about her mother, but you're afraid it'll break her heart too much
>She was an unemotional woman, never cared about you, Adagio, or even herself
>So much in fact that she decided to take her own life

>>29725215

>Her reason being, "If I'm dead then it's not my problem"
>She never wanted Adagio in the first place, so why should she have to take care of something she didn't even want?
>You dragged yourself to the kitchen and pulled out a frozen breakfast TV dinner thing
>The only way you could tell Adagio is if you put the blame on yourself instead of her being the reason
>You sigh to yourself, throwing your breakfast in the microwave
>Maybe Adagio was right though
>You've started to become dependent on her
>Whenever she tried to leave it felt like she would be gone forever
>You tried your best to be that cheerful and loving dad for years, but over time all the bills and the death of Adagios mother caught up with you
>It left you as an empty husk of yourself
>Night of drinking and crying into your daughters shoulders are mostly what occurred throughout the days
>You never took into consideration on how seeing her own father like this made her feel
>But it's too late now
>She's gone, and for all you know, she'll never come back
>Money was always tight, so there wasn't really much for her to come back for
>You sat at the table with your hands on your head
>How could you have let it get this bad?
>Maybe you should go out and look for her
>She did leave with that boyfriend of hers, and you know where he lives
>But scenarios started popping into your head
>'What are you even doing here? can't you realize that she is sick of you?'
>'Leave me alone! I don't even wanna see you again!'
>It's all too much to bear

>>29725221

>Your breakfast finishes with a ding, but you don't even want to get up right now
>But all of a sudden, you hear the doorbell ring
>No way...
>You leap out of your chair and make a mad dash to your door
>You grab the handle with nearly enough force to break it and wildly swing it open
Adagi-!
>Nothing...
>You look around but saw only your run down front lawn
>But you swear you heard...
>Maybe... maybe your just being paranoid
>There's no way she'd come back to such a sad sack of shit
>You sigh and put your head down
>But something small catches your eye
>There's... a letter?
>You pick up the letter and open it
>"I'm sorry"
>What?
>You look around
>In a split second, your view is obfuscated by orange and you're brought to the ground
>There's only one girl you know who can knock you flat on your ass
A...adag-
>"OH DADDY I'M SOSOSOSOSO SOOOO SORRY ABOUT EVERYTHING I SAID I LOVE YOU DADDY PLEASEDON'THATEMEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASE"
>It only took you a second to realize who was
>Right after that second, you squeezed your loving assailant with all your heart
Adagio please... I want you to know that I love you, so, soooo much...
>Adagio gripped your shirt and cried into your chest
And I'm sorry... I never realized how hard I made it for you...
>You held her as close as you could and cried
I just hope you can forgive me...
>She brought her face from your chest to look you in the eyes
>"*Sniffle* Of course daddy... I'm sorry too, about everything I said last night! I don't know what came over me b-but... *Snifflesniffle*"
>She just couldn't get out the words anymore and went back to crying in your chest
>You petted her hair and told her what came from your heart
I promise, things are gonna be different now, you'll be safe with me...
>You kiss her forehead and hold her tight
My dear, sweet Adagio...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Te11UaHOHMQ
~
End

>>29725236
You wrote this? It's really good, Definitely short, but good. You should write more here, we would love to have more writers.

>>29725236
Do you have a pastebin and a name
I am putting this on the writers list

>>29725470
while i have you here my pastebin expired or something so i need to update it

>>29725275
Feh it's been years since I actually wrote something, and even then I had a bad habit of dropping when I'm out of ideas, just as the "You ever wonder why Anon is alone?" threads

>>29725470
http://pastebin.com/hRFMKsN5
Honestly imo the only things worth reading on there is probably some of the maids stuff and the booty games (still don't know why I'm so proud of that one) since everything else is either just unfinished ideas or were dropped due to me being a cunt

>>29725470
http://pastebin.com/H5xQ4842

there no expire date or w/e dunno why that happened.

All the home greentext stories ever lied were lies! Sunset shimmer still tries to break the family with tantrums an emergency hospitalization due to a disease of brain related such father! What it will be!

From the past edition This is readers will follow

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>>29725764

>>29725777
Might even be a bot sticking words together.

>>29718579
>Flag twirler was a unicorn on the cheer squad with Cheerilee, she had a blue coat with a pinkish purple mane and tail that held streaks of gold.
>Summer breeze on the other hand was a Pegasus with a yellow coat and green splotches around her hind quarters. Her mane and tail were Green with solid lines of sky blue running through them.
>”Eww look, it’s like she’s looking at both of us at the same time!” They positioned themselves to be on either side of you.
>”Ugh you’re right Summer her eyes always look so messed up. Guess that’s why you’re called Derpy!” The three laughed as they circled you.
>Ignoring them, you flew over their little barricade.
>”Where do you think you’re going?!” Breeze was determined not to let you leave.
>She flew in front of you and stared you down, almost daring you to do something.
>”I think the klutz is falling breeze!” Flag had used her magic to clamp one of your wings to your barrel sending you to the ground.
>You landed on a sharp rock which stabbed your side, waves of pain rushed throughout your body leaving you breathless.
>”Oh you poor thing! If only you could fly properly with those messed up eyes.” The three laughed as they left you on the ground.
>You lay there waiting for the pain to subside before trying to get to your hooves. The rock shifted as you move giving you unbearable pain.
>”Are…Are you all right?” A colt with a brown coat and hourglass cutie mark stood above you.
“Yeah I’ll be ok.” You try one last time to get up, this time with much more success.
>”You’re bleeding! Let me get you some help!” He ran off before you got a chance to tell him not to worry.
>It took you a few minutes longer than usual to get home, but somehow you managed it.
>”Where have you been?!” Here it comes, another one of you mother’s tantrums.

As always let me know what you think.

>>29726307
Wow I look forward for more

>>29726307
Well, that very nice.

>>29727128
bump

>>29725008
Literally how so?

writers list updated
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there is a discord group now
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>>29721980
>1:18
>After you hit the road (you still have pavement in your knuckles), the journey continues within the comfort of your Mystery Machine.
>Scoob’s a good driver, probably better than you yourself are; it’s better he drive while you relax in the passenger seat.
“So girls, ya’ll remember your words for your songs, right?” you asks your daughters.
>“Mister Anon, you know that not all of us are the lead singers in every single song, right?” asks Sunset.
“Oh. Yeah. Forgot that. Huh.”
>You rest your knuckle on your chin, because dammit, how else are you gonna show that you’re thinking?
“...But aren’t you all great singers?”
>“Well, I mean, we can sing, sure, but callin’ ourselves ‘great’ seems a mighty bit self-indulgent,” Applejack says modestly.
>“Nonsense!” says Spike, “You guys are some of the awesomest singers ever! I bet the band you guy will face off got nothing on you seven!”
>“Oh, you’re such a sweetheart, Spike,” coos Rarity, patting the tiny dog on his head.
>She immediately cleans her hand off with hand-sanitizer.
>How rood.
“So you guys are ready then? Won’t forget any words up there, will you?”
>“Well, you can never be /too/ ready,” states Twilight. “Take me for example: I’m fairly certain that I myself know what to do I’ve memorized everything I’ve needed to, know the words, etc. However, if one of us makes a mistake, memory can either help get us back on track, or at least help us find our way to the end of a song.”
>“Yeah, what she said!” pipes Pinkie.
>Sunset nods in agreement.
>“Yep, so rest assured, Mister Anon! We’re feeling pretty good, but we won’t stop practicing...right girls?”
>A loud “right” is cheered.
>You nod in approval.
“Good.”

>>29729952
can't wait for them to fuck it all up

>>29729742
>>29729853
Yes!

>>29692962
This thread is relevant to my interests. Also, learn to capitalize you illiterate fuck.

>>29726307
>”I’ve been waiting for almost half an hour for you to return from school! Wait till your father hears about this!” She hardly notices the blood dripping down your barrel.
>”And how filthy you are! Go take a bath young lady!” Loud hoof steps approach from behind you at what you assume is a rather quick pace.
>”Sweetie I heard you got hurt, are you ok?” It was your father, he eyed you over quickly and spotted the rock in your lower left side.
“I’m fine dad.” You say rather tiredly, that bath your mom proposed was sounding good right about now.
>”No you are not fine! You’re bleeding honey, here let me take care of this.” He pulls the rock out and grabs you a cloth to cover the wound.
“Who told you I got hurt?” It hadn’t even occurred to you till just now that somepony had gone to look for help.
>”I ran into this frantic colt who told me what happened. Well he told me you were hurt, but not how.”
>Great, now you were going to have to lie about what happened. It would be more trouble that it was worth to tell them you were being bullied.
“I uh.. was playing with the other ponies and got hurt…” It didn’t feel convincing to say, but you hoped they would buy it.
>”You need to be more careful sweetie!” Your dad kisses you on the forehead and sends you on your way.
“Love you daddy…” You rush to the restroom to enjoy a nice warm shower.
>The water rushes over your cut causing you to wince. That wasn’t what had hurt though, it was the fact they did it and laughed.
>How could they be so cruel, so heartless. If it had happened to them they would have cried to their mommies about how much it hurt.
>Their mothers wouldn’t silently judge them, no, they would fawn over their hurt filly. They would get angry and go on a war path.
>Your dad cared though, he cared enough to at least notice that something was wrong. He tried to comfort you, to make things a little better.

>>29731903
>He was the only one who cared, the only one who was willing to lend a hoof to you when you needed it most.
>You cry softly in the shower, the one place where they wouldn’t hear it.
>After a few minutes you hear a knock on the door.
>”Are you all right in there sweetie?” It was your dad, he must have come to check since you were taking so long.
“Yes dad I’ll be out soon.”
>You could hear his sigh through the door. “Listen, if there is anything you need to tell me you know that I’m here right?”
“Yeah dad, I know. Thanks.” You were more unsure about telling him now than you were before.
>Your mother might not really care, but dad would make a big deal of it. He would bring you around to the houses of each pony involved and argue with their parents.
>It had happened before, but over time you realized that only makes things worse.
>Eventually you settled on telling him lies to avoid the extra problems. It felt horrible to lie to him all the time, to make a fake image of yourself.
>It was as if you were forging a mask, one that would hide your feelings, pain, and even your true self.
>After drying up you opened the door to the bathroom, your dad standing there waiting.
>”You know, you’re not a very good liar.” He pulled you close and embraced you.
>”Listen, I understand not wanting to make others worry, but you can’t just bottle up your problems. You have to let us know so we can help you!”
>You slowly started sobbing into his chest, trying your best to hide your face.
>”Shhh shhhhh, you’re okay, I’m here.” He patted your head and held you for what felt like an eternity.
“Daddy… I don’t want to go to school anymore!” You said with your face still buried into his chest.
>”How bout this sweetie tomorrow I’ll take you to the doctor to get that cut looked at and you can stay out of school the whole day.”
“okay daddy…” Your sobbing dwindled down to a little sniffle.

>>29729853
As for the Discord we welcome all writers to join us. I am almost always on it when I am home so if you want to discuss things about the thread or your greens feel free to join.

Pastebin update for the night
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>>29731818
OP's dyslexic.

>>29732032
“Daddy… I don’t want to go to school anymore!” You said with your face still buried into his chest.
I'm not reliving childhood memories. Nope. Not at all.

>>29732334
I thought i'd get someone with that. I'd like to hear any input anyone has on improving the overall feel though.

>>29732346
I'd slower the pacing. The way you tell your story is a bit too speedy for my taste. Other than that, it's pretty good. I think dialogue could sound more natural but I'm always kind of harsh on writer's when it comes to dialogue.

>>29732379
Thanks for the advice i'll keep pacing in mind.

5 pages
And it still continues to grow

I just realized I read the counter wrong
We were on page 5
I am such a derp

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>>29732957

>>29732965
That is exactly how I feel

>>29733003
How about 11?

This is a dramatic story about Diamond Tiara
I am gonna trY to keep it short
And her relation with her parents (Filthy Rich and Spoiled Rich)
This story is set before “Crusaders of the lost mark”

>You awaken in your room.
>Another miserable day. (YAY)
>Another day living your parents live.
>“Diamond don’t talk those ponies”
>“Diamond acct like a diamond”
>Your hear your parents talk.
>As you rise from your bed all you could feel sadness and misery.
>You walk towards a mirror to inspect yourself.
>And all you could see is a shell that is shaped like you.
>And morning mane. (you probably should go and fix this before you get a scolding)
>You take a quick shower just to look presentable.
>You dry yourself off and comb your mane
>As you put on your tiara you think “here we go again”
>With it you put on the smile that is expected from you.

i realy would like feedback on this guys

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>>29734813
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bumperino