Dadonequus: Children of Chaos

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>>29548674

OP is a bit messy since last thread, let me change it.

Feel free to discuss the current stories, start a new one, if you want to try your art, come here and draw something, you drawfags are always welcome.


Pastebins:

Erf (Longest): http://pastebin.com/u/Erf1111

Elo (Smugest): http://pastebin.com/u/Elohemian

Coffeeholic (Italian Anon/Linguini Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/Coffeeholic

Laskvurel (George/AnonFilly/Come Back to Us Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/Laskvurel

Bunny (AnonFilly & Drawfag/Shits Rabbit Pellets Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/Bunnyhood

Ben Dover (Actual Dad Discord/AdventurousAnon): http://pastebin.com/u/Ben__Dover

Hoers (MIA/We will always miss you bby): http://pastebin.com/u/Hoers

JekyllorHyde (WeirdAnon): http://pastebin.com/u/JekyllorHyde

CookieSfh (Tentacles Anon/the green that actually has lewd in it): http://pastebin.com/u/CookieSfh

Wand of Inferno (Mexican Anon/"Special mind" Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/Wand_of_inferno

Zenco (Newfag/Argentinian Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/zenco1

Gumball (Homeless Actor-Singer Anon/Try-Hard Anon): http://pastebin.com/u/GimmeSomeGumption

speed weed (Beach Bum Anon) : http://pastebin.com/a364aFHZ

Previous Colt: >>29446283


Also, we should manage stories on activity. Like, which one is in hiatus, who ded, etc.

Also first for gay interdimensional faggot love

>>29548747
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Also, we should manage stories on activity. Like, which one is in hiatus, who ded, etc.

I agree

>>29548674
Yo, that pic is great who did it?

>>29548819
I think that you fucked up with that > dear anon

>>29549256
Yeah I did, my bad.
Was trying to get the post in between sets.

What do you want to see from the stories /coc/?

>>29549812
What does /coc mean?

>>29549824
Children of chaos :)

>>29549842
Wow, huge whiff on my part.

Well I really like slice of life, adventure, cuddles, soft romance, drama, conflict, humor, and feels. Generally I'm here for the escapism, self insertion, and to put a smile on my have enjoying MLP characters and OC in much better story arcs than the cartoon provides.

Not big into violence, foul language, hardcore sex, torture, and whatever other nasty stuff.

There are some good COYAs running that offer this, I fell out of the Anon in Equestria threads because the greens weren't that good, and the Anon Filly threads have really been lacking content for the last year minus a few bits and spurts since Stand Proud left and others wrapped up their stories. I still follow the Pie Adventure but I hate getting behind because it's hard to find high quality pages outside of Tumblr AIDS.

>>29549842
Kek, I think I like that we are called /coc/
Since this is dadonequus, should we be dad /coc/? :^)

>>29549812
Speaking of this, in the future when things are settled and Alberto goes on a chaos adventure, is gonna be a bit of a CYOA in choosing paths and what not. So the story gets a bit interesting and lurkers stop lurking.

>You were starting to feel like this wasn't actually working. The night was still young. But dammit. not even close to budging. You just had to keep at it.
>"Hello friends!" Discord grins as he pins the mic about. "I'm so happy we're having this party" Discord snaps his talons. dragging Chrysalis over as he picks her up and hugs her to his side. You could already hear her sudden yelp as she was pulled.
>...you wanted this and not wanted this. You hoped Discord didn't go too far. Pissing her off would undo any work you may have done. But dammit, she deserves a good trouncing at this point. Just to put her in her place.
>"My adopted daughter here, sooo cute" He gives her a pinch on the cheek and kisses it, making her struggle to escape even more "She has had a rather rough life, indeed. She pretty much has been treated like an insignificant bug!" He squeezes her tightly and then puts her down as she pats her head. "But now? Now we're all celebrating. Celebrating on the simple fact that she's here with us." Discord starts walking left and right across the stage, sneakily keeping her in place with his magic "It's a bit fearful, I know. Me as a father? I'm sure some of you have your doubts. But if my son, the hero colt himself, is any indication. I'd say I'm doing a fine fine job. Especially since Fluttershy, an element of harmony, seems to think so. Yes, that's right. And....and" He smirks as a halo appears above his head "I can say this...All I wish is to be a family guy. To raise my new children right. And while I have, as some has heard, been teaching my son the way of chaos. My daughter here is a bit too dainty for such a thing. Dainty, cuddly, emotional, and much much too soft for it" The way he says those words, he makes sure to emphasize each one. "So all I can do is wish and hope and lead on the best I can to bring her to a happy life."

>>29550748
>Discord sighs, as the lights dim, and the hue of everything turns blue "But alas, I make mistakes sometimes...ohhhhh" He leans on her, his back stretched across her as he laments. She was trying to keep a normal expression, but she was twitching, twitching with rage. "And when I make a mistake...ahh, the princess of friendship makes me feel like such a terrible failure"
>......
>You slam your hoof on your face. Goddddddammmiiittt Discord.
>You could see Twilight make a sour face at him as he "lamented" on this fact.
>"But, she does mean well of course. I can't fault her for that. But Ponyville....I must ask. Do you think I'm doing a good job? Think hard" He grins a big arrogant toothy grin "Remember, the "Hero Colt" is my son"
>you could hear the crowd murmuring and whispering, trying to come up with a decision.
>"I believe you have been doing a good job, Mr.Discord" That voice....was vaguely familiar. It was a side pony you couldn't even remember if you ran into yet.
>Mayor Mare stepped up on stage. Yeaaaaahhh, you can't really remember meeting her at all. Which was weird since the portal door's first setting dropped you off near town hall.
>"Ahh, Mayor Mare. a pleasure...." Discord holds the mic over to her "Here, I do believe you wish to say some kind words correct? I'm pretty much done anyway and I do so would loooove to hear what you have to say"
>Woah, yeah. This could be your first official meeting with her.
>also, this could be beneficial. Discord didn't go too far aside from a few pokes and prods.
>"I do, thank you Mr. Discord" She takes the mic, and prepares to speak

>>29550834
>"Hello Everypony..Oh" Mayor Mare gives a light chuckle as Discord himself teleports near Fluttershy to sit and watch with her.
>She walks over to Chrysalis, who was now just realizing she was free to move, but just sat there and gave a fake smile as Mayor Mare Approached.
>"I almost forgot, before I speak. Anon, can you step here next to your sister?" Mayor Mare asks.
>You nod...good. Now you could stick by her in case she tries anything.
"Yes ma'am"
>She nods with that half eye slitted, sweet smile. Looking at her up close. For an old mare, she was still....doable. "Thank you, and Mr.Discord..can y-oh" She notices he already vanished back into the crowd. "Well, I suppose that's alright. I can give him his medal late-"
>Discord immediately teleports back, hovering above the three of you with a big smile "Did I hear the word. Medal? As in, a medal that shows just how great I am? hmmm?"
>"In a sense, I wanted to present the entire family with a medal. There's a lot to praise and..oh!" Mayor Mare giggled as Fluttershy appeared next to you and Nymous with a snap of Discord's talons.
>"U-Ummm...hi?" Fluttershy smiles sheepishly, feeling shy as she waved. "Umm..Discord?"
>"Don't worry Miss Fluttershy. As I was saying, I wanted to use this opportunity to commemorate your family for everything you all have done. Anon may have stopped foalnappers,griffons, Saving another universe, and from what I understand, even had a hoof in the banishment of the changelings. Though of course, our princesses definitely deserve praise for that for braving the wilderness to get that done.I feel that you all deserve some recognition as well. For it's very very unheard of for a pony so young to do so many great things. A young mare who braved the world to find her family. A being of chaos whose heart had warmed up to be able to take in one who was lost. And of course, an element of harmony who no doubt keeps it altogether." Mayor Mare went up to Fluttershy first.

>>29550934
>She pulled out a box that had four medals. Fluttershy's was a golden butterfly with a small red heart on it. Mayor Mare held it up to her, making her back up a little. "Is something wrong?" Mayor Mare asked.
>"...well..no" Fluttershy rubbed at her own shoulder, nervous about the whole thing "It's just so sudden."
>Discord could sense his friend was buckling under the sudden pressure. In his mind..well, aside from wanting to show up Twilight. As usual. He actually had caring thoughts in his head. He wanted to be there for Fluttershy, and actually try to keep on with your objective. As much of an asshole he was. He couldn't let Fluttershy down. And you? You were his wingman. So it only seems natural to him at this point to help out when he actually felt like it.
>He plucks the medal and pins it on Fluttershy's chest "Excuse me, but let's just plant the medal and move on to me please. We don't need the theatrics. Besides" Discord shrugs with a grin "We already know Fluttershy is the most amazing fully grown pony in the room. Nymous is just about grown, but seeing as she isn't. She would be my best daughter. And for Foal...well, that's between Twilight and Anon here." Discord grabs the mic and tries to make a joke "I'm sure everypony noticed that they both tend to wig out often, am I right?"
>...crickets...well...not even crickets.
>"......right" Discord looked pretty disheartened that his joke didn't go through. But, he was internally smiling. the attention was away from Fluttershy. And despite her looking a little displeased. She was at least not nervous.

>>29551025
>"Ahrm..well, yes. erm. Moving on...." Mayor Mare then moves on to Discord, pulling out a medal with jagged edges randomly placed. "Mr.Discord, you have shown so much improvement since you first became a pseudo resident of Ponyville. Becoming a fine father and raising a brave colt..and now a beautiful and young mare. It takes a lot of responsibility to be a father. And for you to have raised a hero at such a young age. Well, such exploits cannot be unrewarded. So, without further ado. Mr.Discord, I present you with a medal best representing you're phenomenal yet chaotic fathering practices." Mayor Mare plants the medal on Discord. And..he doesn't crack a joke. or do something silly. instead..
>"Ahh, thank you Mayor Mare. You're too kind" He bows, being very polite.
>He just didn't want to cause any problems for Fluttershy.
>...but then you started to have thoughts on yourself.
>Did you want this medal?
>It'd be nice. But you were working hard not to look too much like a huge hero. Because everytime you gave in. everytime you got too cocky. Everyone else would pile on you, wanting a piece of you.
>But if you accept the medal. Fluttershy would probably feel proud. and you'd have at least a memento to show off to your kids if you do end up being hitched to Diamo-..oh shit.
>You scanned the room with your eyes.
>And there she was, her eyes glued on you as Mayor Mare approached you.
>You could see Spoiled Rich whispering to her husband as well as they both looked upon you.
>...ahh fuck.
>There was no way you couldn't accept it now. If you didn't, you'd look like a shmuck in front of the riches. And you'd disappoint Diamond.

>>29548913
HueAnon

>>29551249
Nope, bunny did it

>>29551180
Discord's speech was so... Discord. But that medal, you can just wonder how much anon's fanbase will grow after that, and how autistic it will become.


Also, have the writters ever thought what will their anons do once they become teenagers? I mean, teens aren't exactly known for having a low libido and stable emotions

>>29551529
>Also, have the writters ever thought what will their anons do once they become teenagers? I mean, teens aren't exactly known for having a low libido and stable emotions

I'm writing my Anon almost like that.

Hey everyone. Just stopping by to actually post in the thread after... Not sure how long it's been since I posted my last update. 2-3 months?

Been caught up in some school work, projects, all that annoying shit. Also, hit that drop in motivation that usually strikes me once in a while, but don't worry, still working on the next chapter.

Wanted to ask you guys, or the ones who read my story, what you guys like about the story, what you guys don't like, and if you're okay with a few things I have planned considering what some Anon's have commented in general about our stories.

>>29549896
>Not big into violence

One of the things I have planned for my story is a lot of action and some mild violence, but nothing edgy like death, gore, all that shit.
If you've ever watched Samurai Jack, that's what I aim for. A serious, action packed plot line with comedy and fun in the right spots to keep it refreshing and entertaining.

Some spoilers Been planning to add Eris into my story since I began this new story. Eris is being introduced in the next chapter, and will be Anon's companion for the rest of his adventures. She'll be a lot different than Elo's flirty, girlish, bitchy Eris, but not too far off from what could be expected for her character.

Something also that's made me ponder is that you all seem to like the naive and innocent Kid Anon, but originally, I had planned for him to grow up during his adventures. There are two ways this can go:
1: Anon experiences everything with less interval breaks so he matures mentally depending on the adventure, but the short time means he won't age quickly throughout the story.
2: Anon experiences everything at a realistic pace where he gradually grows older, but the childhood will slowly fade away and the charisma that he brought with his childishness will be gone.

Not sure which route to pick, so I want to get your opinions on it and I'll decide from there.

>>29551996
Why not both? I have nothing wrong against your Anon growing up, but why not start with him maturing mentally, and then when you feel comfortable with the setting and characters, you make him to grow older?

>>29551996
Can you tell us more about how you plan on writting Eris?

>>29549812
Fully detailed and steamy fluttercord.

>>29552402
I plan to write her sort of like a Midna companion. She'll tease Anon, push him to his limit, and most important of all, keep him on track and motivated. But unlike Midna, she'll be almost like Discord, but instead of being verbose and proper, she'll be a bit more lay back, chill, and modern.

>>29551025
>And for Foal...well, that's between Twilight and Anon here.

Oh come on that was prefect! Got a chuckle out of me.

Also I thought Mayor Mare's speech was nice, same with Discord handing pf Flutter's medal.

i cant believe gumball is fucking dead

>>29551529
One can just imagine how erfanon's will manage to keep his massive, massive lust on check, especially as a horny teenager.

PhD, I think that he would keep himself in check, but since his mind regressed the most, maybe his teens years will be a wild fucking ride for him

>>29553185
Tiara is going to get teenage pregnant for sure.

>>29553185
PhD is not above hormonal changes, but he is also not above the fear of getting his dick torned off by Moonlight. If anything, he would be much more carefree, snarky and free spirited as a teen, living and learning through different perspectives since Luna and Celestia would teach him tons of cultures, traditions, and types of magic.

You guys are too fucking slow

>>29554009
BAT UNDERAGE PUSSY ON NERD HORSECOCK ACTION GONE MATH

>>29554009
>but he is also not above the fear of getting his dick torned off by Moonlight
sounds like a fucking cunt

0/10 terrible character

>>29554836
>wanting your qt daughteru to get preggers at like 16

>>29554791
Youbare going to prison, PoneFlo

>>29554009
>living and learning
>Live and learn
So PhD is going to be HANGING ON THE EDGE OF TOMORROW

>>29554791
There already was this short and the best part was Cherry saying "Cum inside me, make me yours" while PHD was climaxing then the Alicorn patents walked in, startled him, pulled out, then stumbled backwards and came everywhere.

does nymous just look like an old anonfilly or is there some "canon" look i'm not aware of?

>>29555832
Hot, black, lean, sexy, gorgeous.
It's not an anonfilly style. Think Chrissy but pony and a young mare. Her swagger is enough to kill most normal ponies.

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>>29555832
Here

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>>29554009
Nothing will save her ass from an either very fiery death or suffocating death if she ever harmed him, I don't care who you are.

>>29555865
I meant in terms of colour and hair style, not attitude or composure.
>>29555873
looks pretty much the same to me

>>29555890
>I meant in terms of colour and hair style, not attitude or composure.
My bad, maybe it was lost in translation.


Black body, black mane, black tail. Body is like velvet but has a sheen. Mane, straight, black, silky, and flows like water. Tail, kempt, soft as bliss, kept together at the end with a small red bow.

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>>29556109
I don't remember reading that description anywhere

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Okay guys, just for fun discussion:
One Anon changes story with the other Anon for a short period of time. What happens?
Say like, ErfAnon challenges PhD to see who has a tough life, they change even cutie marks.
I thought about this 'cause I remember Fairy Odd Parents and Jimmy Neutron doing that

Ofc let it not just be those two special snowflakes! There is plenty of Anoncolts and our special lonely anonfilly!

>>29556123
Maybe, maybe not, but oh boy is she hot. Remember, I'm here for my own level of self insertion and escapism so that's my super hot pone Chrissy.

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>>29555832
but wait a more important question: what kind of pupper is the captain?

>>29556201
A more squat, oddly proportioned black lab that still has puppy qualities. Take Winona art style but apply those mods.

>>29556222
Also cute as F

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>>29551180
>disappoint Diamond.
Hah, Anon's motivator; and he worries about being an influence over her. Discord finally getting a medal was damn cute.

>>29551996
>2: Anon experiences everything at a realistic pace where he gradually grows
That's what I'd opt for. Your anon is a fine character, but character development by no means hurts a character. Physically aging as an instrument of development is fine and dandy.

>>29552826
>i cant believe gumball is fucking dead
Neither can I, he was so happy to get a new charger for his phone only to be struck down and encouraged to eat all the eggs in his prime.

>>29556170
>One Anon changes story with the other Anon
Kek, Erf Anon changes with Card captor Anon change with PhD Anon.

erf Anon gets instantly anal pained into oblivion, rages and gets in a fight with CC Discord, who isn't prepared for his 'son' having such a sudden and deep improvement in his grasp of chaos magic.

Your Anon at the same time is now waking up in PhD's shoes, thinks he's in hell when inducted into Moonlight's fitness course of doom. Rainbow freaks out about the Spanish Anon keeps bellowing and his sudden girlish limp physical performance when Sweetie Bell shows up and he jumps on her while Moonlight freaks out for the great shame the prince has brought to her daughter etc.

PhD wakes up in Discord's house, pulls the curtains back and screams as the X-captain converses with him until Chrysalis wanders in and demands to know what's up his ass. Which causes him to scream even more. Chrysalsis gets frustrated and thinks he's emotionally lying to her again, torments the fuck out of him while he has a nervous break down, then scoffs and leaves to go play with her car suggesting he best get to school. Shell shocked PhD wonders thru the door and wobbles his way around town until Bonbon finds him and starts talking to him about her spy pony mischief which is where he starts piecing things together, except he thinks she's a changeling.

>>29556170
Just fuck off with this super meta bullshit, the Anons should never ever meet period. A fucking small visit of PHD to Scrappy? It's fine as long as it has a justification, ErfAnon getting in PHD's dimension and accidentally getting confused by a changeling? Also fine and had a justification, but this kind of crossover? No, fuck off with that

>>29556170
man i don't have time to read every single anon story. i'd be so lost trying to understand what was going on

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>>29556237
>PhD freaks the fuck out the entire time
>Alberto wants to kill himself thanks to the concentration camp that is Moonlight's training
>Erf can't get a hold of not reformed Discord
I want this

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>>29556170
I fucking hate both of those series.

>>29556109
I always pictured Scrappy as pic related

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>>29555876
Hah, that might be true, Luna and Celestia didn't give Eris a talk or even a warning, the moment they saw that she had "kidnapped" their child, they just rekt her. In the end, they pulled out because PhD had to step in to prevent Eris from being either banished, or reduced to ash.

One can just wonder what would happen to Chrysalis if she ever laid a hoof on PhD, right?

>>29556298
But point is taken, shows aside, the idea is there and is funny to think about it

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>>29556333
I only stated that I hate those two series, never gave my opinion on anything else. With that said, I fucking hate Jimmy Neutron and the Fairy OddParents

Bung

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>>29548674

>>29556747
brought that from /pol/ for you guys. enjoy being autistic and gay

>>29552826
>>29556237
What the fuck even happened to Gumball? Did he die or something?

>>29556123
Certain OC stuff i leave to the reader's imagination. Although art made for Anon and Nymous show have pretty much set what they look like.

>>29551180

>Mayor Mare then moves on to you, holding out a medal that shone a bright gold. in the shame uf a circle with a star in the center, straight edged wings spreading out from both sides of the medal. "Anon, this medal represents your bravery, honesty, and heroism in the face of danger. You are a young colt that faces down danger not for yourself, but to protect your loved ones, your friends, and indeed...all of Equestria, no matter what Equestria that may be. Though, I must admit, it does seem irresponsible for a colt to do such things. It would appear that chaos, while being beyond us all, can in fact be used for the betterment of pony kind. And with that, I present you with this medal symbolizing that heroism." She gently plants it on your chest.
>You accepted it...oy..you accepted it. And after doing so, the applause came. It felt great and terrible at the same time.
>At least Diamond looked pleased. She was smiling so wide, she was looking at you like you were some unobtainable god....despite you already being hers....ehhh..thinking of it that way was kinda....oy.
>But you did do it. It's done. And....as you looked to your right towards Fluttershy, she was looking back at you with happy tears in her eyes.
>Fluttershy...
>Mayor Mare then moved on to Chrysalis...here we go
>Chrysalis so far, was acting the part, looking proud and all.
>Mayor Mare took out a medal that was a plain red heat made of a gem. almost like the cutie mark that Chrysalis herself had. "Nymous, although you haven't been here long. Your tale of how you came to our town touched my heart. And the heart of everypony here really. Such bravery, such heart. Well, I suppose that is why the medal I present to you is in the shape of one. You worked very hard to get here Nymous, and I think your inspiring adventure to find your brother is worthy of this medal." Mayor Mare gently pinned the medal onto Chrysalis's chest.

>>29557098
>"Mayor Mare, if I may. I'd like to say a few words" Chrysalis said in a kind and rather inspired voice.
>......wut?
>Not only you, but Discord as well looked to Chrysalis with varying amounts of worry. Fluttershy just looked on with a smile of starry tears. wondering what she could want to say.
>"Of course." Mayor Mare stepped aside as Chrysalis stepped forward towards the crowd.
>You actually started to sweat. You couldn't say anything standing so publically. but your mind was screaming.
>"I'd like to thank everypony for this wonderful award. And this beautiful show of good will. It inspires me, really it does. That is why I have a request." Chrysalis looks back at you with a cruel smirk, then back to the crowd looking all sisterly and nice "My brother, my loving brother, I know his sweetheart is among the crowd. Can I please have a spotlight on dear dear Diamond Tiara?"
>And just as sudden as she said it. a spotlight fell upon Diamond. She gasped, and wondered what was going on with wonderment as the rest of the crowd gave her room.
>There was no wonder here,only death.
>"N-nymous?" Diamond said in a quiet voice, in a trance like state just from being called.
>"Yes my dear. You are needed for the request I'll make. And that request? It would fill my heart with joy, if we had a romantic song played so that you..." She then looks back at you with a pleasant smile "And my brother could share a dance together. I feel kind of bad that this party is all for me. And with all the things brought in to make it spectacular, I thought it would be nice to have it shared among you and him. This would be alright...wouldn't it?"
>..........
>...........
>Your mind went blank as every pony unanimously agreed it'd be a nice idea.
>Diamond was excited and immediately ran to her parents to ask if she could.

>>29557174
>"Daddy, Mother..can I..Can i..CAN I?!" She was hopping about all spritely and cutely.
>"Ahrm, Diamond Tiara, you're in public! I will not have you hop-" Spoiled Rich was about to tell her to calm down, that she was embarrassing herself, but then Filthy cuts in as he pats his daughter's head.
>"Of course you can sweetheart."
>"EEEEEEEEEE!THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU!" Diamond Tiara span about, hugged both Spoiled and Filthy, and ran up to get on the stage.
>Spoiled rich just planted her hoof to her forehead and shook her head "You don't think she could have been a little less embarrassing about it?"
>"Come on Darlin'" Filthy gives his wife a gentle nudge "Are you telling me you don't want to see are little princess happy?"
>"......" Spoiled Rich sighed "She better be happy, if he missteps even once I'll make sure to throw him into the best dance school money can buy. I swear it"
>That fucking bitch....
>Chrysalis passed by you, carefully whispering so only you can hear "Good luck my dear brother, no help this time. And once they see you fail. You'll not only have crushed your lovers heart. But you'll be seen as the silly colt who made his marefriend cry. It's a shame I had to sacrifice her...but. I need this victory...oh so badly.....good luck" Chrysalis hopped off stage as spotlights hit both you and Diamond as she climbed up the small steps to get to you
>You look at Discord, pale white.
"W-what do I do..help"
>You whisper to him.
>He doesn't say a word. All he does it tap at one of his horn, gives you a wink, and walks off with Fluttershy to observe the show.
>His horn
>....The horn.
>HAHA! DISCORD YOU MAD GENIUS!
>Hhehehehehe...oohhhh...this is good. So what if you didn't have her hypnotic ability to get you through this. You had your horn. And with the horn..you can cheat.
>Oh yes...you hid your smirk. But you could see the surprise on her face when she realizes she failed. Ahh, to have such power truly was the best.

>>29557203
>And y'know? You would make sure to make this dance legendary A dance of elegance and poise. So much so that you'd show up even that princely prick version of yourself. Even if he couldn't see it. You could live knowing that he'll never have the power to outdo this.
>Yeah, as Diamond drew near. Confidence filled your very veins as you calmed yourself and faced her encroachment with a gentle smile.
>When she finally got up to you. She was blushing, and suddenly felt a little shy. "Anon..a-are you really going to dance with me? I-in front of all these ponies?"
>You take her right hoof, raise it, and give it a kiss as you look to her with a cavalier's grin. "I would dance with you for any reason my dear. Any reason to grace you with the art of the dance, to grace our onlookers...it is in fact, an honor and a pleasure"
>"o-ohhh...." she couldn't respond.
>You looked down at the crowd as Chrysalis took position, the rest of the crowd finding the whole scene sickly sweet.
>Chrysalis rolled her eyes, awaiting your "inevitable" defeat.
>Meanwhile, a beautiful, long maned grey pony steps over to Vinyl. bringing along her cello as she mutters "Finally, a moment to add a little class."
>When she steps over to Vinyl, she gives her a nod "You wouldn't mind providing the rest of the orchestra, would you?"
>Vinyl shrugged, and pulled out a very very dusty and old record and blew on it before putting it on her turn table as Octavia readied herself to play.
"It looks like it's about to start...diamond, my dear Diamond."
>You take your horn and place it on your head as you give her a bow
"I promise to make this dance a truly magical and unforgettable experience"
>you say this to her, but you gave a glance to Chrysalis.

>>29557226
Hah, yes, do it

>>29557226
>Chrysalis mouth was agape, she never EVER guessed or even considered you had another charge. In her head, she was now wondering if she was being rused the whole time if you could use the horn more than once. First the door, now this?!..in her mind, at this moment, she couldn't figure out what was going on.
>You were fine with this. You couldn't think of a time where you felt you were in total control the whole way. She can't beat you. And for once, with suggestion from Discord, you were on top. It was...kind of delicious.
>Yeah, even as she looked at Discord with a quick vicious glare. He caught on fast enough to just wave at her, and throw her a kiss. She was pissed. Good, now maybe she'll come to understand that being a prick is wrong.
>As the music starts, you cast your spell to make the dance oh so magical. First thing's first. You slowly stand upright like a human and take Diamond by the hoof, and start dancing rhythmically along with the waltz. Your focus never leaving Diamond, your eyes never looking away from hers.
>She gave a surprised yelp when you pulled her up to dance along with you, but as you lead her along with your sudden expert skill in dancing. She became entranced once more. "A-Anon, y-you're so much better than last time..a-and we just started." She was so into you, she didn't even realize you were getting help from the horn.
"Ahh my dear"
>You spoke in the tone that a prince would speak to his princess.
"For you, everything must be perfect...now come along, and join me on our journey of dance"
>You lean close to her, even over her and then pull back as you change directions.
>"P-perfect?...Anon..." She brought her head close as you guided her along "Why are you so nice to me? Sometimes I think back to how awful I treated you when I first met you and..."

>>29557269
>You gave her a quick peck to stop her from speaking as you lead her into a small spin, then gazed upon her eyes, slowing your dance for a moment in tune with the music.
"And..you needn't worry. That was only the past when we did not understand who we were. In fact, my princess, without those circumstances happening. we would not be together now."
>Meanwhile, while this was going on. Filthy, who was first ok with this. was starting to sweat in worry. "hrn, ya don't think this is a little much do you?"
>Spoiled scoffs at him as she looks on "You're the one who went all in without discussing things with her first. Besides, if he's the one then he's the one. At least he has class, nopony else in this castle is capable of dancing like that, not even Princess Twilight."
>It was then Filthy, who planted his hoof to his forehead "I really hope I didn't jump the barn on this one"
>As you continued to dance, Diamond sighed, feeling a bit of regret about her own haste to dance with you. "yeah...I just wish it was the future...we're dancing in front of everypony. But, we're not even married yet or have our own kingdom."
>As you slowly step along with her in a gentle spin then turn. You gave her a sweet arrogant smirk
"Maybe so, but can we not be prince and princess still?"
>God you felt your dialogue was cheesy..but hey..it worked.
>"....but we're not..." she sighs
"....no?....why don't you take a look again."
>She was confused by those words, but when she looked at you with her confusion. She noticed you wearing a princely shirt, red in color, adorned with a yellow sash and with a white undershirt. You also had a crown on. There was also mirrors magically placed along and around the stage. as you danced close to them. Diamond could see herself in a beautiful red flowing dress. Her small tiara replaced with a beautiful gem encrusted crown.

>>29557291
>She was near speechless "A-Anon..h-how..."
"Shhh, no questions my princess. Just dance along with me, I will keep you safe and I will love you always."
>Chrysalis couldn't believe it.
>"Good, isn't he?"
>She looked to her left, Discord with sitting next to her, enjoying the show...on Chrysalis's face.
>"....You gave him unlimited power just to one up me? Are you a fool? Have you not seen what happens when he has so much power?" She scowls
>Discord shrugs "I have, he gets a little too..hrn...what do they keep saying? "High...and Mighty" " Discord snickers "I'm surprised you care"
>"I do when you're interfering in OUR game" Chrysalis keeps from growling or raising her voice, the ponies around her were all fixated on the dance.
>"A game to determine who buckles under the pressures of good and evil? That game? A particular game that doesn't seem to have either budging?...eh, so booooring. Watching you writhe when you realize you've already lost is so much more fun" Discord was doing his best just to keep from bursting in laughter.
>"You're such a nuisance..." She muttered as she went back to looking at the dance
>"I know, it's so good to be one too, but I wonder Chryssy. Despite him one upping you, you seem to be fixated on that adorable little waltz. Anything in particular catch your fancy?" Discord asks, actually enjoying the fact that you and Diamond seem so happy.
>She hesitates for a moment, then answers with a sigh "Only that he could have all this and more if he just chose to join my side. And yet he chooses not to...I just don't understand"

>>29557314
>"It's because he has other friends he doesn't wish to betray. A very very hard lesson to learn. Oh yes....quite the lesson indeed..." Discord didn't sound jovial at all when he said this, he sounded serious, as if recalling a painful memory."And besides, he's not betraying you by not helping you. Since you're still friends and you really have nothing better to do at this point than either sit around or walk about Ponyville"
>"No thanks to you..." She nearly growled, but kept herself in check "I will never see what he likes about these goody two shoe idiots."
>"Some of them can be pleasing to the spirit Chryssy my gal.Not all of them, but enough of them.Either way, it doesn't really matter, You're stuck as a pony and as my daughter until something...well...ridiculous happens. But I doubt THAT will ever happen." Discord shrugs with a confident grin.
>Chrysalis was disgusted by those very words "ugh, you're such a pitiful idiot. I've always succeeded before Discord, and I will succeed again. I'm not like that failed version of myself. I am...Q-sdfmd" Chrysalis is hushed as Discord puts a paw over her mouth.
>"Let's not get over excited shall we? Other ponies are present" He smirked at her.
>Chrysalis pulled away and mumbled to herself. She was angry, so angry she nearly spilled out a secret she couldn't let anyone know. "....what a terrible night to have a curse..."
>She then looked up to you, the dance, still feeling aggravation of being defeated. But she also sensed something else, a powerful arrogance emanating off of you. It made her think. Of what? even she couldn't figure it out yet.

>>29557339
>The dance resumed, Diamond enamored at this point, she didn't think it couldn't get any better. "My prince...you're...so wonderful. It's just like a beautiful dream"
>She was tearing up at this moment. It really was like a dream. Each expertly guided step, each twirl, each close hug and movement felt like an eternity of love. She couldn't get enough.
"A dream you say? No..I don't think it is...not yet"
>Oh hohohoh, if this didn't top anything. nothing would.
>"N-not yet?..what do you mean?" She was brimming with curiousness, she didn't know how this could get any better.
>But as the music picked up, you started leading a little more aggressively as you used the same charge that gave you this grace, and the clothes, to do something else.
"Look around my dear princess...."
>She did, and when she did. she could see clouds all about. she looked down, and she saw that you both were rising into the air as the crowd disappeared into a sea of sky and clouds. each step leaving golden sparks that drifted downwards.
>Of course, this was an illusion..though you both were stepping up higher as if on invisible steps. That was real.
>The crowd could only see you both rise, with the sky being transparant and the sparks being bright as they lit the room.
>At first, Diamond felt a tinge of fright as she hugged close to you "A-anon! W-we're! We're!?"
"Shhhhh"
>You gently rubbed your hoof across her mane and held her close as you continued to dance.
"I will never let you go...our dance? It will be a dance in which even the kingdoms of old will never be able to match as the stars themselves look upon us with envy"

>>29557356
>The illusionary sky started to become filled with shooting stars. What was fright became pure bliss as she was wowed by it all. "I never...I never knew you could do all this.."
"For you my princess, I'd do anything. I just want you to be happy..."
>And that did it, she was now lost in the romance. And nuzzled close, almost barely losing her rhythm. But your own magically enhanced skills keeping it all together.
>The dance, the music, the magic. it captivated everyone in the room, just as it captivated her heart.
>As the music drew to a close. You and Diamond slowly descended as the illusions slowly vanished.
>And right at the end, you leaned over her, looked into her glossy lost eyes, and go to give her a three second kiss on the lips.
>However, both your focus is immediately lost, missing your kissing oppurtunity when fireworks start bursting above you as the crowd begins to cheer.
>You look down at Discord, who gave you a thumbs up with his paws as his talons each shot it's own type of rocket or firework above the stage.
>The crowd was just completely amazed.
>And Diamond Tiara, she nuzzled into you, smiling the whole way.
>She was blushing, still lost in the magical moment.
>Though, the noise of applause was getting her out of it little by little. But, the lasting effect was enough for her to kiss you on the cheek and whisper "I love you..forever" as she smiled and hopped down on stage to talk with her parents to tell them just how magical it all felt.
>the horn plopped off your head as you stood there, in your own daze. You really went all out there.
>you put your hoof to your heart...it really was romantic...wasn't it?
>The entire crowd was cheering and clapping. Stomping their hooves on the ground with glee.
>Except for Chrysalis, who just faked a smile as she slowly clapped her hooves together.
>...what a moment indeed.

>>29557291
>tfw Filthy is starting to double think letting DT to be with Anon

Good thread, slow day.

>>29556894
Even the puppy?

>>29558356
yes

>>29557339
> what a terrible night to have a curse
I see what you did there.
good show erf

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>>29557368
Hah, fuck yeah, implicit showing of Anon's character development there was nice.
I detect some foreshadowing there in Bug bum's brooding conversation with Discord?

Here take a sunset for the ride.

>>29557098
>in the shame uf a circle
wew

>>29557174
>>There was no wonder here,only death.
kek

>>29557291
>"Maybe so, but can we not be prince and princess still?"
>>God you felt your dialogue was cheesy..but hey..it worked.
>>"....but we're not..." she sighs
>"....no?....why don't you take a look again."
>>She was confused by those words, but when she looked at you with her confusion. She noticed you wearing a princely shirt, red in color, adorned with a yellow sash and with a white undershirt. You also had a crown on. There was also mirrors magically placed along and around the stage. as you danced close to them. Diamond could see herself in a beautiful red flowing dress. Her small tiara replaced with a beautiful gem encrusted crown.
Smooth as fuck

>>29557368
I knew Discord would love that feat of chaos he just pulled off.

>>29559382
wew...need to fix that in the pastebin

*shape of

Bumpity

Hi /coc/! How are you doing?

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>You really wondered, was your life bad enough to be considering this?
>Abandoning your safe life to make a deal with such a bizarre and strange creature just to accomplish a dream?
>...
>Yes?
>No?
>...
>Your life was… average
>You had an assured job in the future, a good family and some friends
>But you feel that you could reach more than that
>Adventure
>Magic beyond of the human imagination
>Waifus!
>The first day of your new life hasn’t started yet but for your amazement you slowly open your eyes to see the planet Earth at the distance with stars behind it
>That’s right, you’re in the outer space
>Obviously, your first reaction is to cover your snout with your front hooves
>”Oh relax Pepe, you can breath” says a calmed Discord
>Trusting in Discord, you take off your hooves and you turn to see him “Discord, what are we doing here?”

>>29561984

>He flies up to you and he holds your head to his cheek ”You know, I thought you will like to see your home for the last time before leaving”
>You find this pretty weird coming from Discord but you can’t help it but drop a tear when you remember all the memories of your life in that big blue ball
>You admire your teardrop floating calmly to your planet
>But immediately you reaffirm your enthusiasm thinking about satiating your lust for excitement. Great adventures and new friends awaits you in a fantasy land
>Discord materializes square glasses on his face and a pair of papers on his paw ”Now my little friend, we have to talk about the conditions to be in Equestria”
>You cock an eyebrow at him “Conditions, what do you mean?”
>”You really, really want to be in Equestria?
“Of course, It’s the greatest dream in my life”
>”I hope you’re willing to work then”

>>29561992

>Okay, maybe making a deal with a interdimensional overpowered being who can toy with the fabric of time and space wasn’t your best idea
>Fuck it, whatever he wants to do with you, he can’t break your spirit
>You gonna take the bull by the horns
>He might be powerful but you’re obstinate and stubborn
”And what’s that job, if I may ask”
>He starts to look at the sides and sighs. He takes his glasses off and drops the papers making them float away in the void of space ”Mmm… Nothing hard, but it’s gonna be fun” He giggles nervously. You start suspecting what his intentions are. But, you don’t really mind that. This is an opportunity too good to waste
>You shrug and say “I guess a little work It doesn't hurt anyone…”
>”That’s the spirit!” he snaps his talon and a hole in the middle of nothing filled with a swirl of colors appears, and while you’re looking at it he pushes you inside

>>29561999

>Moving like a torpedo you fly through a flashing colors worm tunnel, wind goes through your coat and you scream while Discord laughs maniacally.
>The psychedelic tunnel ends and you fall on a swivel chair in front of a metal desktop with two paper trays, behind it there’s a big chair. You’re in an old office without any windows, a wooden floor and beige walls. In a corner there’s a file cabinet. The only decoration is an old Celestia and Luna painting in the back wall.
“Discord, what’s happening? Where we are?”
>”Shhh… calm down little colt, try to keep your cool. By the way, this is a formal occasion, so…” and he makes your chair spin and when he stops it, you have a tuxedo with a red bow at your neck “You need to have a better aspect”.
>”Huh?”
>You can hear a door knob behind you slowly opening. You notice how at the door window it’s written “secruoser ynoP”

>>29562010

>An old gray pony with a mane with not much hair enters the office and walks slowly while almost shivering, he has a cane and glasses.
>When he reaches his chair he focuses his sight in the draconequus and you. He presses a button on a vintage desktop intercom device “They’re here” and after a minute a voice with a little of static noise answers “Well, time to interview the applicant. I’ll send him Lyra”
>Lyra? What’s happening?
>”Hummm, can I leave? I have things to do” asks Discord to the old Pony
>”Yes, but have you told him about the program?”
>”Mmmm, of course Mr. Inkwell, do you really think I would take somepony from another dimension and recruit him like a secret agent without giving him any details?”
>What? Secret Agent?
>”Isn't that true, Pepe?” and he gives you a stern expression
“Mmm… yes! Of course, he’s telling the truth!”

>>29562043

>”Silly me! I can’t believe I almost forgot to give you this” Discord snaps his talon and materializes a saddle bag with the same color as the bag where you saved your stuff “Here you go Pepe…” you grab the saddle bag and you can see your equipage inside it.
>”Ah Ok, I see. You can leave now Mr. Dearcorn”
>”Thank you Mr. Inkwel, Arrivederci!” and the chaos spirit leaves the place with a smoke bomb.
>You can hear the door behind you opening and you see a familiar mint unicorn.
>”Hi Lyra, how are you doing?”
>”Pretty well Mr. Inkwell, is he Pepe?”
>”Yes, he is. Dearcorn left him here an while ago but he has to leave for personal issues. Hey Puppy, you must be tired after such commute, would you like a drink?”
“Mmmm… a coffee would be fine”
>He presses the button in his intercom “Hello, could you please bring a cup of coffee to my office?”
>“I’m sending Ristretto to your office”
>“Thank you”
“Then… What am I supposed to do here?”

>>29562053

>”You were selected for the application to the junior assistant, just like Discord told you before. You now have to fill the forms to begin” answers Lyra
“Why me?”
>”He didn’t told you? Geez, I guess he spent most of his time on Earth playing jokes on you to avoid the matter. Discord has made a report about you and how you would give your life to live in Equestria. He wanted to you to pay his debt”
>It doesn't seems a bad deal for being part of a Discord scheme, it could be something worse like help him to slave Equestria or make some stupid prank.
>But, why Discord cares so much about his reputation or helping Equestria?
>Also, what’s up with him and those “personal business”?, he has a personal live to begin with? In the show he fucks around the M6 most part of time
”Debt? You mean the Tirek fiasco?”
>”That’s right. He told us how he wanted to clean his reputation and how you were the perfect po- person to the job”
>”I don’t get it, why didn’t he simply works for you?”

>>29562123

>Before she answers a mare with yellow coat and a ponytail-styled brown mane with a chubby body and a smiling starfish as cutie-mark enters to the office with a tray with a coffee cup and sugar cubes “Here you have Mr. Inkwell” she looks a little nervous. She places it at the Mr. Inkwell front
>”It’s for the colt, thank you” and Ristretto gasps “Sorry, sorry Mr. Inkwell” The old stallion doesn’t look amused “No problem…” He smiles at her and the mare places the tray at your front “Here you have… Hey who’s a cute little colt?”
“Me?” you answer with doubt
>”That’s right! you. So... who’s the father?”
>Lyra clear her throat “He’s nopony son, he’s our new agent” she remarks with a serious tone
>Ristretto looks amazed ”Oh… I see…” and then, she retakes her cheerful expression “Who’s a cute future agent?”
“Me of course!” you say with a cocky expression, pointing at yourself
>She giggles, but Lyra is getting tired of the whole scene and she wants to resume with her duties. “If you two have finished playing, we have a busy day ahead…”
>”Sorry Miss Lyra, I’ll leave you alone so you can continue with your job” and she leaves the office whistling some song

>>29562143

>“How I was about to told you, that’s a good question, Discord works with us to a certain degree, but not like a complete agent. He can’t do the job due to his… non-conventional ways to work. We needed some unknown pony, a perfect nobody”
>Huh, that makes some kind of sense
“Well, where do I sign?” and you take a sip of your coffee
>”Listen to me, before you accept the contract, I have to tell you the main agreement points. Number one: For a period of 10 years your life is gonna be property of SMILE, you have only one day a week dedicated to you. Number two: your name is gonna be Anomaly--
“What?” You interrupt Lyra in protest ”That name sounds stupid” You harumph in resignation.

>>29562197

>”Sorry, but that was the best name we could think and it’s already registered. Like I was about to tell you before you interrupted me... you have to pretend to be a colt, my nephew under my care. Number three: You’re legally a colt, that means attending school and not drinking alcohol or smoking. Is everything I said OK?”
>Sounds a bit lousy but not hard. You can do all that as long you can make reality your dreams of awesome adventures and being with your waifus
>”Can I read the contract? I don’t want to lose any detail”
>Lyra puts the contract in front of you and you read it. It doesn’t say anything more than what she told you before. The only bad part is that you can’t have sexual relations until you’re 16-years old.
”Right… I sign here?”
>”Yes, but Mr. Inkwell is our notary, he has to do the rest”
>How that can’t be his job? He mispronounces every name

>>29562210

>You fill the forms and then very quick he does his job, putting a expedient number and sealing at the bottom of the contract. After that he saves the papel at a drawer of the file cabinet.
>Everything is ready, Lyra and you leave the office and walk through a long corridor with some doors, a water dispenser and led lights.
“So, Lyra... I have a question regarding the contract”
>“What is it?”
“A cuddle is considered ‘sex’?”
>She gaves you a weird look “No…”
“And a kiss?”
>”Neither…”
“Why that part of the contract though?”
>”Because Discord gave us a full report with everything you posted in that thing… fourthchan and we don’t want any scandals with you and your ‘kinks’”
“Hey I was joking, key? I wouldn’t do any of that… but I would make an exception for you babe” and you wink at her.
>She looks a bit upset
“Sorry, sorry. But would you like me to be a human again and have my fingers dancing with grace through your mane while my other hand caresses your back?”

>>29562222

>She brushes her face but quickly turns it to the opposite side of you “Pepe, I don’t know what you think of me, but I’m a proper mare and I don’t have any of those weird fetishes…”
>”Whatever you say, but… do you like tacos or churros?”
>”What?”
”You know…” you wiggle your eyebrows smiling with perversion
>”Pepe, stop it”
“With what? Whatever you do with Bonnie it’s not my business.”
>”Tell me one thing, are you humans always so impolite or you are like those stallion colts who don’t know how to talk with a mare and spend most time watching porn magazines?”
“Me? Of course not, I had sex all the time back in Earth”
>”I wasn’t talking about sex, I was talking about relationships”
“Mmmm…. Yes, I had the most beautiful girlfriend”
>”It doesn’t look like it…”
“Whatever… where are we going?”
>”You need some medical check-up, we need to have a talk with Jade, he’s from the science department”

>>29562234

>”You need some medical check-up, we need to have a talk with Jade, he’s from the science department”
>She stops in front of a door and both of you enter a white room with anatomy diagrams, a silver exam table, a sink and a desktop. Behind the desktop there’s a tall white stallion with a brown mane, white coat and a brown circle around his left eye, he has a white paper with a bent corner like cutie mark. He’s reading some pages in a folder.
>”Hey, Jade” says Lyra
>However, the stallion keep reading while muttering some incomprehensive gibbering
>”Jade!”
>And the stallion raise his head and look at Lyra and you “What? When did you come?”
>”Right now, Jade. Here’s our new agent”
>”Huh? Oh, I see. Discord did a good work with the transformation, he looks alright”
“Indeed he did, thank you. I can see you’re a nice stallion with good taste” and you brush and bite your lower lip
>You don’t know why, but you feel… horny
>Everything is so arousing

>>29562243

>Maybe because you dedicated all these years to consume pone porn and you are surrounded by real ponies with every little detail, including their private parts
>”What?” screams Lyra “Are you gonna act like this with everypony you see?”
“Are you jealous? Because you didn’t look interested on me”
>”It’s not that, you can’t do advances on everypony you see”
“Hey, I wasn’t doing advances in anybody. I was trying to be polite with the doctor…”
>Jade clears his throat to catch our attention
>”Polite? I’m not stu--”
>”Guys! We don’t have time to waste, I have to ask him some questions”
“Can I take this off?” you point at your tuxedo “I feel a little uneasy with this”
>”Go ahead” says Lyra with a tired expression
>You take the tuxedo off, reach the exam table and make a French pose
“Contain your orgasms, people” and you wink at Lyra and Jade
>Lyra makes a facehoof and the doctor twitches an eye while forcing a smile
>Yeah, that was fucking cringe

>>29562253

“Sorry… what do you need to know, Jade?”
>”First of all I need some blood to check your health” He takes a little syringe from a botiquin on his desktop and walks towards you.
“It’s not gonna hurt me, right?”
>”Are you scarred, Pepe?” Lyra asks you with a cocky look
“Me? Not at all, but I want to be prepared. Mmmm Doctor… can you give me a lollipop later?”
>”Yes…”
>Dr. Jade cleans the syringe needle with alcohol, shaves a little part of your chest and applies some gel there. He walks to his desktop to take his syringe and after he comes to you, you close your eyes and start shivering.
“When you say doctor, I’m ready”
>You nervously open an eye and you can see a lollipop on the Jade’s hoof “That was it, and you were so brave that you deserve a treat” he says with a sarcastic tone.
>You take the lollipop from his hoof and you start to lick it “Mmm… chupelupe”
>”So, how was the travel between worlds?”

>>29562285

”Pretty rad, it was like being a bullet flying through a crazy color tunnel!”
>”I see, interesting. Discord changed your body before that?”
”Yes, when I was using my computer” He continues writing in his notepad what I told him
>”And you chose to be a pegasus or he just did it?”
”No, he asked me what I wanted to be”
>”And why you went for the wings?”
>You shrug while you still lick your lollipop “I don’t know, I felt like it was the best option”
>“Interesting…” He touches his chin and sighs. After a minute he takes a look at your saddle bag “Is that yours?”
“Yes, you want to take a look?”
>”It would be useful” You take the saddle bag to give it to Jade. He opens the bag and starts to view the content, especially the walkman and the brick game, he looks pretty interested. “Bio, come here!” he screams at a door behind the desk.

>>29562292

>There’s no answer “Wait a minute please” he walks up to the door and to open it, you can hear a sound of a electric cutter and coming from an obscure room with only a light over a white stallion with a brown tale and a gray circle with a black thick outline divided with a horizontal and a vertical line inside. He’s concentrated cutting something in a table giving his back to the door.
>”Hey Bio!” and the mysterious stallion turns back he takes off a welding helmet with magic. He looks exactly like Jade, except for the horn on his head. “Yes, Jade?”
>”You might take a look at this” and the unicorn comes to the same room as you, he takes a glance at your stuff. Using his horn start to levitate your electronic devices and he starts to disassemble them.
“Hey! What are you doing?”
>”I’m analyzing this technology, it looks pretty advanced... don’t worry, I’m gonna leave everything in his place after a minute. Could you tell me what are these machines?”

>>29562301

“Okay, the gray is a portable electronic game system. Pretty simple, but entertaining. And the red one is a walkman made by Sony in 1998, it has automatic reverse, bass boost and three-band graphic equalizer in addition to an AM and FM stereo digital tuner”
>”FM?”
>Multiple parts of your devices spin in two yellow led rings at every side of him while three notepads on the floor write themselves with a pencil each one. At the same time a small wind comes out from Bio, he has his eyes with a yellow light and he adopts a yoga posse.
“Mmmm… who are you? I don’t remember in the show a unicorn so powerful… and regarding the FM, it is a radio band but I’m sure you horses don’t have radio yet…”

>>29562310

>”I’m only a unicorn who studied magic and science with dedication. Ah, yes we have radio but I’ve never heard of ‘FM’, I know AM for Amplitude modulation, we have two experimental stations operated for the PBC, a public corporation created a year ago. You want to take a listen?” He stops the whole show he was doing a moment ago, stands up, rearms the walkman and the brick game and gives them back to you both.
>You turn on the walkman in the radio position. You select the AM band and set the auto memorization on it, it founds two stations. You tune the first one and you hear a feminine voice talking about current affairs, the Crystallization and Flurry Heart to be exact. And the other station is playing some electronic pop song.
“Weird, the first station is playing a recorded program”
>”Recorded? That’s impossible, at this hour they broadcast live” Bio answers to you
“Sure? Because they’re talking about the Crystallization and that was a year ago more or less…”

>>29562313

>”That was yesterday” Lyra gives you a strange look
>What?
“That means… I’m in the start of the 6th season?”
>”Season?” ask Lyra
“I mean, I went back in time!”
>”Oh, that sounds adequate to our plans…” says an almost familiar voice. You can’t recall who is it, but is on the tip of your tongue
>You turn back your head and you can’t believe who it is
>...
>Fuck

>>29562317

That's all forks!

>>29557368
When are they gonna fuck?

That was a very nice update. I love it when Chrysalis gets flustered.

>>29562317
Jesus, give me a moment so I can read all of this

>>29561660
I'm dandy.

>>29562347

They spectated to my death, but I was writing all along!

>>29562317
It's looking good so far but you really need to lrn2english

>>29562452

I would really appreciate if you point out my mistakes.

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>10 minutes into scheming and chill and she gives you this look

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>>29562700

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>>29562700
Yooo, this is great

>>29563206
>>29563205
>>29562718
thanks i might have time to do one request for tomorrow if anyone has any
i can't draw people so nothing like that please

>>29562197
>Anomaly
Alright, hope that this is a set up for something bigger, this update was honestly much better than previous ones, but you have a lot of gramatical mistakes, not as bad as before though.

>>29557368
I don't know what to think about this last update, it felt too similar to PHD Anon and Cherrywood's own dance.

>>29563445
Do you think that you could draw a picture of PHD Anon and Scrappy playing chess?

>>29563460
maybe... I'm pretty new to this general so i haven't read any greens aside from the big one and im not even done. so I don't know if I could draw it too accurately.

>>29563510
I can see it now, vividly, but i can't draw for shit

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>>29562700
not obvious enough

its just going to be passed off as anonfilly cancer
maybe if you included her slitted pupils

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>>29563585
it would be a pretty weak disguise if her eyes didn't look like pony eyes.

the puppy is supposed to ward off confusion over who she is

>>29563534
So as I'm waiting in the drive through.
Anon is sweating bullets, deep in thought.
Scrap-pup has a shit eating grin with his tail wagging.
Applebloom cheering next top scrappy on her hind legs with red pom poms

>>29563613
this

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>>29563445
Yeah I do have a tiny request.
Care to draw, if not all just a few of the Anoncolts in this thread in Poker cards?
This was an idea since 2016, it only shows Discord's claw and paw getting a hold on the cards of the anons, ErfAnon is Aces, PhD is King, the only anonfilly from Bun's story is Queen, Alberto is Joker (or a +4 Uno card), 10 spades/diamonds/heart/clover can be discussed

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>>29563676
If you do it, this is how my Anon looks like. Big thanks to Elo for making it

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>>29563613
i could try that
>>29563676
>>29563701
maybe next time

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>>29563727
you coo as fuck mah drawfriend

>>29563456
That I give it to you, dance was cuuuute but it also felt like an answer to PHD own moment I liked more the dance between the smug and bat, sorry erf

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>>29563852
All I see is Skeletor doing the pterodactyl

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>>29563606
the point is so the viewer knows its chrysalis

she CAN change her eyes

>>29563808
'PHD' is elo, right? I couldn't get into his story, his writing felt too stilted to me or something. Something about it just doesn't flow right or sit well with me.

>>29557368
>As you hopped down the stage. Pinkie went and hopped back on. She had a tear in her eye. "That was so beautiful..." she squeaked.and wiped the tears from her eyes as she brought out her microphone. "Well everypony..ahrm." She nearly choked up, and took a moment to compose herself. "Well everypony, ahhh....ahhmm...Ahh shucks!" She started crying on stage "It was sooooo magical, I don't think I can even move on to super awesome dance tim-WOAH!" Pinkie fell back as Vinyl immediately took it as her cue to blast jammin dance music for everyone to dance to. "....Well...I guess there's no time but now time for everypony to get their groove on" She says to herself as she lays on her back.
>You weave through the dancing ponies as you walk over to Chrysalis, still in dismay about what just happened.
"Heya sis, how ya doing?"
>You say arrogantly as you wiggle your eyebrows at her.
>"....That was a dirty play Anon" She grumbles
"Uh huh, says the dirty dealer who did the dank deed of setting up my dastardly drop"
>You laugh at that, you didn't think you could fit so many ds in a single sentence.
>"I did that to show you the truth. And then you had to go and spoil it all." She huffed, it appeared...she was out of ideas at the moment. She wasn't trying anything else.
"Then I guess it wasn't a very good truth, was it? C'mon...It's over. Why don't you just enjoy the party?"
>"....because it's not fun. It's not a thing I do." She looked upon the dancing ponies with disgust, something you took notice of.
"Why, because you see what they are doing as "Foolish" and "pointless", right?"

>>29564431
>"What? No, this is all fun and games for them. Even I understand how important it is to relieve stress. But their taste in music is terrible, their style is bad, and it's all gaudy. All it's good for is the food" She looks over at the sound system "I will say this much, ponies from years past had MUCH better taste then they do now. Arias and sonatas is better than...what do you even call this?" She really didn't like the music at all.
>...you didn't really like it either to be honest. Of all the genres of music to pick. it had to be...
"It's dubstep....and I admit...it's pretty garbage."
>"...at least we agree on that" She sighs "So this is how it's going to be, a constant back and forth. You, able to rely on your friends and your magic to avoid giving in. Me, just being a superior being and nothing more"
>This was kind of getting heavy. It was like you and Chrysalis were actually having one of those rare bonding moments.....over the fact you both hate dubstep.
"I'm telling you, things would be better...they would be nicer"
>"And as I told you, things would be better for US if you just gave in. More than better, we'd have a whole world to ourselves."
>You sigh, it just wasn't happening.
"...So is this how it's going to be? We're just gonna push and shove each other without either of us giving in?"
>"It seems like it, doesn't it? Without a major catalyst, all our efforts against each other is in vain. Makes me sick just to know how many times I've failed"
"Well, y'know...I haven't really seemed to make some headway either. You're still a bitch"
>"Yes...and you're still a petulant little asshole"
"Yeah...So, no matter what I do. You don't even see the slightest good in being friendly with ponies?"
>"No, and I gather you'll just keep on resisting me for the sake of your friends."
"Yep.....you wanna get some of that punch from the table?"
>She sighed, then nodded "Yes, sure why not...I need to wash the bad taste of gratuitous happiness from my mouth anyway"

>>29564482
>You both head over to the snack table and use a ladle to fill some paper cups with some cherry punch.
"So..you want to make a toast or something?"
>"hmmm..I do, give me a second" Chrysalis pondered on what to toast on. It took her half a minute. but it finally donned on her on what the toast should be. "I got it. I think we should toast on the very catalyst that will make one of us see eye to eye to the other's ideology. Sound good?" She looks down at you with a smirk.
>You shrug, was about as good as anything else.
"Sure..ok"
>You hold up your cup
"So then, a toast! To that catalyst...thing"
>She holds up hers "Yeah whatever, let's just tap the glass and take a HNNNN!"
>Chrysalis is startled by the approach of two ponies, making her cup fall forward and splash all over your face.
"U-Uuu-ughhh"
>It was cold, there was ice in the punch bowl itself, so when it splashed in your face. the cold liquid sent a sharp jolt through your entire body.
"T-T-This is w-w-what h-hell must feeGYAH!"
>You fall over after accidentally snorting some punch. it went from cold to the burn of having sugared liquid in your nostrils
"IT BURNS!"
>Oh dear..Anon, are you alright?" You are helped up by none other than Mrs. Cake "we didn't mean to startle you like that"
>You coughed a little. oooghhhh...that sucked.
>When you get to standing on your legs. You noticed a worried Mrs.Cake beside you. Mr. Cake standing beside Chrysalis.
>"ahh geez Anon, really sorry about that. Really, we didn't mean to spook you or your sister. We just wanted to come chat with our future classmates." Mr.Cake said as he began to serve himself a glass of punch.
>Future classmates? This confused both you and Chrysalis.
"I-it's alright...erm..what do you mean "Future Classmates" ?"
>"Oh" Mrs. Cake giggled "We signed up for Mrs. Muffin Top's parenting classes."
>.....oh great. It was that?! That's what she meant?!...well..so much for keeping it a secret from Chrysalis

>>29564510
>"Parenting class? I...don't remember anything about that" Chrysalis gave you a subtle death glare. Welp, there went bonding time.
>"Oh, you didn't know? Weird, we would have thought your father would have told you. I wonder if it slipped his mind..hmmm" Mr.Cake wondered "Oh well" He chuckled "It's not like it's a bad thing. Personally, we both signed up because we want to be prepared for when our little Pumpkin and Pound cake grow up a little more."
>"Mhmmm, you know what they say. A prepared parent raises a happy foal" Mrs. Cake smiled as she gave you a gentle pat on the head.
>You only gave an awkward smile. Forcing it, because you didn't have to be a changeling to know that Chrysalis was teeth grindingly angry at this point.
"T-that's really nice Mr. and Mrs. Cake."
>"Awww, we haven't even seen each other much and you seem so comfortable around us. Discord must be doing a really really good job. " she smiled sweetly as she decided to give you a gentle hug.
>"Yeah, a lot of orphans don't usually get accustomed to things so quickly. But look at you, so young and already a hero. I..er...we could never really let our foals do that. Y'know, it's dangerous. But, I gotta say. You're the very definition of the word "go getter" "
>Mr. Cake complimented you as he head his drink towards you before taking a swig.
"Yeeeaahhh....ummm. Would you guys mind if I hung out a little. I think my sis needs some alone time..maybe?"
>But Chrysalis immediatly makes the answer for you as she forces a sweet smile.

>>29564572
>"Oh no no, please Anon. I'd rather you stay by me...we have so much.." She nearly makes a low growl "To discuss" She then makes a gentler smile to the cakes "So please, would you excuse us?"
>"Mhmm, come on dear. I want to see if you can still boogie" Mrs.Cake chuckles, ignorant of what was really going on.
>"I'm not that old, I'm still the dance champion. My old moves are the best moves." Mr.Cake felt pretty confident as he joined his wife and walked off.
>Chrysalis then approached you, so wanting to have another chance of choking the life out of you. "So....then..."friend"...when were you going to tell me about this?"
>You step back, waving her hoof and trying to calm her down.
"Woah,woah,woah, in a room full of dancing ponies. remember? I mean, geez! If anything, this is actually your fault!"
>"My fault?! How dare you....And how, pray tell, is it my fault!" She growls as she points to herself, those old daggers appearing in her eyes once more.
"A..ahmm..look, it's true. If you didn't pull that crap in mentioning the other dimension. Twilight wouldn't have spazzed on Discord and forced him to take parenting classes. Y'know, something we'd ALL have to go to?"
>"My fault....Twilight?....ngh" Chrysalis's rage subsided as she realized was indeed her fault. "T-that idiot....that horrid little purple pest....A-are you telling me she seriously thinks parenting classes would fix that living embodiment of shit?"
>..ok, it seems the situation is diffused. She stopped focusing her anger on you. But, damn. was she still angry.
"Considering your the one who goes on and on about how ponies are too nice and try to help eachother and how it's all bad...you should have seen it coming."
>"Uuuuugghhhh...." Chrysalis goes to get another glass of punch, but stops halfway and drops her cup "....I need to intoxicated right now. I don't care anymore right now...I'm losing my edge if I somehow didn't see this coming...I'll never make it through this night now."
>intoxicated?

>>29564637
>You plant your horn on your head, and do her the favor of filling her a cup with hard liquor, the hardest of liquor.
"There, try drinking that."
>"Hrnnn?" She looks to her right to see a cup by the punch bowl, filled with some sort of brownish gold liquid. "..what's this?"
"A human drink. You want to get intoxicated? This stuff will do it....let's just say I'm repaying more of that debt I owe you."
>"...paying more of that debt you say?" Chrysalis takes the cup and sniffs it and pulls it back. "What is in this? This isn't poison is it? I've never smelled anything so strong."
"I promise you, it's not poison. I guarantee you that in like..five minutes. your entire world will change."
>"...huh" She inspected the glass again, she scoffed a little with doubt in her breath "We'll see about that..hrnn..." She wasn't actually drinking it though.
"C'mon...I told you, you have my word. I thought you would want to try something humans drink."
>You tapped your hoof impatiently. You were actually trying to help, maybe...maybe..get her to see your side of things finally. and she just had to be difficult.
>"Fine, fine...down the hatch, as they say" Chrysalis open her mouth and guzzles down the liquor before slamming the cup on the table. "There, now what?"
"You..just sort of wait. Trust me, that was magically enhanced. You're going to feel pretty hammered soon."

>>29564681
>"I better, but just to let you know. I can hold down my juices pretty good. Even the toxic liquids that come from the dotted poisonous plants of the Everfree have no real effect on me and also have I ever told you I wanted to molest to the point where you almost let yourself go but then it turns out it's not me, just one of my children pretending to be me and also it'd be a he and he didn't take a bath in like forever.....that would be...sooooooooooooooo funny" Chrysalis giggled as she pulled you close and started giving you a gentle hug.
>......uh oh
"chry-...N-Nymous?..y-you ok?"
>"Mhmmm, I feel so good all of a sudden that I actually like dubstep now. Ponies suck still though...ohhhh..." She giggled as she looked over to Discord, who was putting off ponies with his inappropriate disco dancing "Did you ever notice that Discord was made up of different animal things?......that's so.....stupid" She laughs
>....ok, you did NOT mean to get her this drunk.

I invoke the Sun to be raised in this thread
to bring it joy and to not be dead.

>>29564688
>drunken Chrysalis
And that is how Anon finally scored

>>29564688
Nothing can go wrong

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>>29562317
Hah, nice update Z; I now see you delivered on that characterization. Fun set up for the plot lines too, keep going. Secret Agent Anon hired by Discord to pay for his sins has allot of potential.

>>29562700
Waaa, nice nymous

>>29564688
That was great. Anon and Chrysalis bonding time, the side dressing of Mrs and Mr Cake going to the waffle professor or whatever her name is, and Chrysalis getting black out hammered, this party has started.

And wait, that was Anon's last horn charge of the day, wasn't it? Oh my, the escalation potential. Soon, Nymous will be putting the moves on Anon, and cause a scene as she gets in the punch bowl and slams his head under between her legs in an act of such extreme lewdness Vinyal misses a beat, Octavia snaps a string, and Twilight whips a note pad out and starts taking notes on the height of natural phenomena taking place before her purple princessy eyes. Fluttershy cries, discord freaks out until she starts squeaking on about how her little anon has finally matured in into the ribald stallion she knew he would. As a result, Discord's mind implodes and he falls to pieces melting away. Flutershy out discorded discord that day.

Rainbow doesn't get it, why the music stopped. She's still blind folded and playing the hell out pin the tail on the pony, and the ponies gasp as she wonders ever nearer to the lewd punch bowl and tumbles into it. Pinning the tail square on Anon's left flank, causing him to buck her in the cunt so firmly she passes out, falling face first into the punch bowl too.

That's enough for Diamond, she's beyond flustered. Her quaking legs carry her to the punch bowl where her prince just fucked the brains out of the element of loyalty while cunt blasting his sister. That kind of sexual power is the prince Diamond was been pining for.

Even Trixie takes heed, and chews on a pine cone pining for pine scented pinatas.

>>29565294
>I invoke the Sun to be raised
The sun must set before the sun may rise!

>>29564176
>Too stilted
I absolutely disagree with you, sir.

>>29563808
But not so much with you. I can see the obvious similarities, both couples danced and rose up to a magical created starry night sky, dancing across it. They have their differences though.

PhD and Cherrywood had a date prior to the date while this was a trickery created by Chrysalis and fixed by the power of the horn. It is not a rip off, but it does feel very similar.

I will have to also agree that I liked how elo did it way more. Dance was incredible, first we have a complete failure at a romantic dinner, but PhD and Cherrywood shrug it off and decide to go somewhere else, then we have a callback to that laboratory, and then is when things get cool.

The first thing towards that dance was a setting that felt like a horror story, ponies frozen in place, and the lighting was all weird, but then Eris appears and tone is more cautious, with her subtly teasing the couple to a more relaxed tone as Eris reveals that she is quite the romantic draconequus.

Then the dance starts, and at first is just PhD and Cherrywood clumsily but happily dancing under a spotlight, and then things go escalating until we have the magical dance across a starry night sky, just to slowly get back to Earth as PhD and Cherrywood gently kisses.

Erf was much more direct, and I liked the dialogue between ErfAnon and DT, I like how smooth he is with her, but it lacked all of that build up and the big finale.

>>29566620
worse thing for me is i utterly forgot their dance. I must have botched my memory because my intention was for it ti be different.

>tfw phd is a naturally better dancer

>>29566739
>Naturally a better dancer
He isn't though, him and Cherrywood were clumsily dancing, and as the music advanced, they stopped caring about dancing good or not and instead just followed the other.

And don't worry erf, I still love you, and as I said, it is not completely similar, at least not for the most part it was just the climax of both dances that came up as similar. Sorry for not postibg in recent days

>>29566787
its fine, i need to read that chapter again

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>>29564688
A drunken Chrysalis is probably going to end both hilariously and badly.

Excite.

>>29566620
>I absolutely disagree with you, sir.
Doesn't change the fact I can't get past the first ten chapters without stopping.

>>29568394
Yes, and I think that the problem is with you, not the story itself

>>29568394
You're right. It's garbage.

>>29568782
Shitposter-chan, I thought that you had died

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>>29567971
>A drunken Chrysalis is probably going to
You are clearly a gentleman and scholar, I concur with your point and offer a point of order that it might be voted on before the floor!

Hear here! Let the point of order come to comity!

Also, boobs because page 7.

>>29569549

Now it's my turn to save the the thread from the page 9 from outer space.

I wonder if Chrysalis is the tyoe of drunk bastard who starts crying

>>29571078
Probably not but it would be kinda silly in this case and it could even work out because she's not being angry.

Yo

>>29564688
I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT

>>29568764
Then you'd be wrong. The English is sub par.

>>29563613
im almost done but can't deliver until tomorrow night

>>29571830
So is with erf's story, while grammar is a complain, the quality in the actual story telling is great. Again, problem lies in you

>>29571830
Why the people here is so picky? If you see a mistake, point it out to help the writers to make a better job. Half of the writefags here don't speak english as a first language.

>>29572129
I'd need to be an editor for every chapter of his and go through all of the chapters on his pastebin.

'Pointing it out' wouldn't work.

>>29572035
Erf's grammar was a whole lot worse when he began. I was the same guy that asked him to chill out with the period abuse. Just because you have no problem with bad English doesn't mean everyone else shouldn't.

>>29572179
Erf's grammar is still terrible, will you discard his story just because of that aspect? And just like in your example, Elo's grammar has improved a whole lot. Just because you want to disregard story telling in favor of a much more superficial aspect, doesn't mean that everyone should.

>>29572179
I mean in every post, for instance, in the WoI story ever time he updates there is like 3 posts complaining about how bad he is on english but only the Sunsetfag helps him pointing out some errors.

>>29572203
My only complain about erf is the number of typos he had and the abuse of ellipses he does, for example:

>Oh......no....this is bad!

>>29572229
Which is not the issue here. You say that a story is not worth of reading if it doesn't have a perfect grammar. That you are fin in disregarding plot, characters, and everything that makes a story good, because of grammar.

>>29572284

>>29572203
My only complain about erf is the number of typos he had and the abuse of ellipses he does

>My only complain about erf

>My only complain

>only complain

>>29572308
Which is just a dumb redirect. Discussion started when I said that I disagreed on your position about Elo's story. The only complain that you have given is that his early chapters had poor grammar. So unless you honestly come up with an flaw about his story telling, then your point remains as "I didn't like his story because grammar" which is honestly a pretty stupid point to dislike a story.

>>29572284
>>29572308
You're responding to a different person.

>>29572216
I've only ever read Erf's story.

>>29572341
I'm not that anon, I only posted >>29572229 and >>29572216
In fact, I'm a writer who has serious struggles with english and while I can't identify very well grammar mistakes, the typos drive me crazy

>>29572353
Everyone here does it, it's pretty obvious when a day without updates from he, ths thread just has bumps

>>29572372
My mistake then, my complains were directed towards the other guy. As for you, yes grammar is important, but story telling and everythting that involves it is much more important. Focus on that first, then come later and fix any typos that you might have.

>>29572390
The story can be a fantastic masterpiece of a writing, but if the grammar reads like ebonics it turns to shit.

Structure is as important and content.

>>29572904
>Structure is as important and content.
Reeeeee

Structure is as important AS content.

>>29572904
Jesus dude it's not nearly that bad. Considering it's fan fiction this is gold quality. If it were a technical engineering document it would still be more than acceptable.

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Are we talking about how our grammar is the best of the board again?

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>>29572954
>If it were a technical engineering document it would still be more than acceptable.
>a technical engineering document

>>29573080
Apparently, and it's a huge waste of time. All you writers are good but apparently someone's all hung up on prefect English that isn't even taught in schools anymore.

>>29573089
Ugh, because people consider drawings and sales fluff as engineering documents and I was focused on product specs, user guides, and functional errata.

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Leaving the autism aside, tomorrow I shall post the first part of Cherrywood's adventure in manehattan. Hope that you guys are looking forward to that. I also want to apologize for not posting any green in several days, but the flu got the best of me and couldn't muster the strength to do write anything for like 4 days.

>>29573130
I look forward to it and today was the day it felt strange when you didn't post green. It's good to know you're alive and hopefully better. Seems like you were taking care of yourself since you weren't crazy active.

Random question, how's the weather down there? Still warm and humid? Figured being cool would feel nice but people were giving you shit for the loud AC unit so I hope it is still working.

>>29573130
Also I should get your ass to Colorado one day.

Come on Erf the world is waiting

Oh thank you yes

>>29564688
"Uhm, erm."
>You didn't know what to say, she was wobbling about. And with nothing to say, she just spoke even more. "Anon, Teach me how to step the dub"
"what?"
>"Y'know, what's it called?" She taps at her chin "Right" She raises her hoof as she smiles when she realizes what she herself meant "Dancing. Dancing to this particular music. How do....do......do you do it"
>What in the...
>She wanted to dance? To this crap? erm...
"Well, just look at what everypony else is doing. Their bobbing their heads up and down, moving their hooves to the beat, headbanging. Stuff like that and...oh geez"
>You notice Twilight dancing extremely terribly
"D-don't do what Twilight is doing, she's just a pretty bad dancer when it comes to music like this"
>"Bad Dancer? or maybe....best dancer. Look at her, she's dancing a lot more spritely than the rest of these fucks. Grrr, I'll show her. I'm gonna take her dance and improve upon it a million fold. For I am queen! Queen of eveeeerryyaahthing" She had a drunken form of jealousy towards Twilight, and walks off into the middle of the crowd to really get her groove on.
"W-Wait! You can't just do that!"
>You rush up to her and try to hold her back, but she just gently pushes you aside "Outta of the way Anon, it's super dance time." She laughs arrogantly "Watch thiiiies"
>And then she did it, she started dancing like an absolute retard. Swinging her hooves about, shaking her butt, and bobbing her head every which way.
>She was so damn drunk she didn't even realize how idiotic she looked. This may have been a bad idea.
>She was also using too many human words now.
>Someone was bound to notice
>Hell, maybe serving her human alcohol was the worst part about this. Alcohol can usually kill a lot of bugs with a few dabs. There was no way, even as a tough bug queen, that she was going to be able to resist it.

>>29573442
>And as you contemplated this. It only got worse as some other teenaged colt started to dance near her. then in front of her. He didn't seem weirded out by her dancing. And he looked quite suave
>"Heya Nymous, I noticed you dancing alone and thought you might want some company" He said with a slimy smirk.
>"Huh? Yeah, sure. But can you keep up with me I wonder?" she replies as she tries to keep up with some nonexistent beat she was hearing.
>"Uhm, I uhh. Well, I can. I'm actually quite the dancer. But your dance I think could use a little improvement, nothing wrong with it really, I just mean it could use a "personal" touch" He says as he gets closer, captivated by her looks.
>"Reeeeeeeaallly? Usually I'm up for a little small talk" She slows down her dancing as she just looked up at him with a drunken but sexual look. her cheeks blushing from being drunk. "But I can tell you got a thing for me. Let's just cut the fat and get to the meat, hmm? Why don't you come home with me riiiiight now. We can get intimate, I can get close, I can wrap my legs all around you" She grins at him
>He starts blushing profusely. This was too much, it was moving so fast "Ahrm..uhh. Ok erm, don't you want to get to know eachother a little first though? I wasn't kidding about helping you with your moves, you wanna start with that first?"
>"Noooooooo" She plants a kiss right on his lips "I wanna take you for myself and wrap you up in my cocoon"
>"C-cocoon? L-Like...u-u-under the bedsheets?!" He was beat red at this point
>"Sooommmeething like OMPH!" She groaned as you ran right up to her front and pushed her, her wobbly weak body unable to resist as you pushed her with insane speed towards the library doors.
>But the moment you do, you lose your grip and slam right onto your face.
>When you get up....she wasn't there.

>>29573491
Oh yes, this is excellent

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>>29573095
Funny, right? They must be great at english but they can't write an story on their own!

>>29573491
"Fucking dammit! I forgot my own goddamn spell! FUCK!"
>You gave your face a quick rub and rushed back into the library.
>Chrysalis was just standing in front of a bookcase. looking at the words on the spines of the books.
>You stomped up to her, feeling anger for what she just tried to pull.
"What were you thinking?! How could you just offer that guy sex like that?"
>"Hmm? what?" She looks at you, blushy and confused.
"wrapping your legs around him. Cocoons...crap like that. Remember?"
>She giggles cutely "Ohhhh, no no. I wasn't interested in that. I just wanted to skip the foreplay entirely and just put him in a cocoon so my entire hive and I can feast on him. Ahhh well. Hrnnn.." Chrysalis goes back to looking at the books "Wow, a lot of these are pretty shit"
"Could you not curse please?"
>Geez, if she kept it up. someone was gonna hear.
>"Fiiiiiine, whhhaattteevverrr. When did you turn into such a prude Anon?...you prude. Big big big BIG prude. That's you" She wobbled over to you and pointed at you "Prude"
>God
>You were a babysitter
>You were babysitting the fucking queen of the changelings.
>Though, it was your fault.

>>29573546
>"Anon, you ok?" You hear a familiar young southern voice.
>Oh shit..
>You turn to see none other than the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Coming up to check up on you. It seems they saw you rushing Chrysalis towards the exit.
>"Ohhhhohoho. Lookit lookie loo. It's the Cutie Mark Crusaders" Chrysalis chuckled as she glared at them with a grin "How are you three? hmmm?"
>"What do you mean how are we? what are you up to? It has to be something bad if Anon pushed you away like that" Scootaloo gave a brave and angry look at her as she flapped her wings in a threatening manner.
>"Bad? Nothing baaaaad." She leans back, her eyes spinning a little. "I was just calling Anon a prude for being well...a prude" She then points to Sweetie Belle "You, Shrieky Boat"
>Sweetie Belle looked at Chrysalis with discontent "My name is Sweetie Belle"
>"Yeaaaaahhhh ok. ahmmm...You think Anon is a prude, right? I'm pretty sure you doooooooo" Chrysalis giggled "I hear you think he's all arrogant and thinks he knows everything. Riiiiiiight?"
"Chrys-Nymous! Can you just relax for two seconds? What kind of question even is that? Leave them alone and find a place to sit down until you get your head together, ok? Please?"
>"Oh hush you prude. Prudish prude." Chrysalis waves her hoof in a way to shush you before looking back at the CMC "I'll tell you all something. If you all agree with me that he's a big prude. I'll uhhhh....I'll......I'll ermm......I guess I just won't put you in cocoons and actually let you roam my kingdom when I conquer Equestria. Dealsiesisis?" Her speech was slurred, the alcohol was completely in her system. She was out of her goddamn mind.

>>29573634
>"Uhhh, Anon. I hate to ask this. I REALLY hate to ask this. But, is she ok? She doesn't look so good" Sweetie Belle actually had a bit of concern for Chrysalis.
>"Yeah, ahrm. ah know she's evil and all but ah got this feelin' like she's about to keel over or somethin'" Applebloom too, looked on in concern
>"eh, who cares? I think we'd actually be better off if SHE WAS "keeling" over" Scootaloo however, was not concerned. And rather, hated her the most.
>C'mon Scootaloo, we're Cutie Mark Crusaders. We may not like her, but we can't be wishin' for stuff like that. What if we managed ta help her and she became good?" Applebloom asked, she felt uncomfortable knowing any of them could think of her actually dying.
>"I guess." Scootaloo sighed "So, what's wrong with her then?"
"She's drunk"
>"Drunk? What's that mean?" Applebloom asked. She has never heard that term before
>none of them did.
>"Anon, I'm not druuuunnnkapap" Chrysalis burped "I'm just feeling good mood feelings right now.It's a party, isn't it? You all should stop thinking of such dreeeeeadful things"
"Nymous, we just don't think you're ok right now. I;m asking you to just take a rest somewhere. The library is huge. There's probably a few places you can nap."
>"With that music blaring? What are you, stupid?" Chrysalis looks over to the CMC as she points to you "Isn't he stupid? I think he's super great. Great pony to have around. But heeee's sooooooooooo stupid.I think one of this dumbest decisions he's ever made was like....things having to do with other things. It's a lot of things. But yeah, he's kinda ok for being dumb. But, I gotta. I gotttttaa really ask this. What did you two see in him again? Love wise I mean. Because I gotta say, I reeeallly gotta say. If it was me? I couldn't ever fall in love with him. Fun pony to hang out with sometimes. But none of that stuff"
>"Are ya seriously askin' us that question?!" Applebloom was stunned, blushing just a little at how embarrassing it all was.

>>29573658
>Chrysalis then made herself sound like a typical teen "Like, duuuhhh. Totally"
"Chrysa-NYMOUS! Can you just cut it out! C'mon!"
>you grab her by the hoof and try to drag her away. But she just pulls it away as you fall back on your face. She leans down and looks at you before tapping your head "I sometimes kinda sorta wonder how your skull hasn't cracked like an egg yet. Soooo weird"
>"Look, I'm NOT answering that question. And neither is Applebloom. We know you have to be up to something. We know you can fake how your acting. You're a changeling after all" Sweetie Belle bravely stepped up. "So stop playing games or else!"
>"Or else? hmmm" Chrysalis rubbed at her chin, thinking about those words "Normally, I'd call you out on that and say how futile your endeavors are. But what the hay! Let's change subjects to something fun. Like, which element of harmony do you think is the worst? I vote Twilight Sparkle. Her title as princess alone makes her insufferable. But if the question was on princesses, it'd definitely be Cadance. Why you ask? Simple." Chrysalis sighed and leaned back as she explained her reasoning. "I was thiiiis close to conquering everything. How was I supposed to see a giant dome of love magic just come out of nowhere? How is that possible?! I had Cadance weak and suffering in those caverns and her hubby was so drained that I'd have to use a sippy straw to get any more out of him. And yet they conjured up a magic powerful enough to defeat me and my entire hive. It's like the ending to a story written by incompetent children for other incompetent children to read. It's not realistic and it sounds like it was just pulled because of terrible ideas."

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>>29573545
Yeah.
Totes funny.

That time Chrysalis got so drunk she went full meta

>>29573442

Fuck it

I'm gonna skip the last month of your story just to read /drunkrisalys/

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>>29573545
>Star

>>29573755
Hah

>>29573755
How many charges does anon have?
Also I doubt it's anywhere near midnight

Bubg

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>>29573755
>>Chrysalis then made herself sound like a typical teen "Like, duuuhhh. Totally"
kek
Drunk Chrysalis is the best.

>>29573755
You gotts love the drunken bug queen

IWTCIDC

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>>29575534
She might not be too thrilled to find out you fucked her the morning after though.

>>29575552
What if she likes alcohol? What if we get semi-alcoholic Chrysalis?

>>29575952
>always drunk or buzzed 10/10 'sister' keeps trying to cocoon your classmates
Probably even worse.

>>29562700
I want to fuck that bug horse

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>>29576688
I would one of her changelings.

>>29576719
All drones are male my dude

>>29576738
Even better

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>>29576738
Good thing changelings aren't drones.
Not to mention there's only a select few drones in a hive to mate with the queen, every other unit in a hive being a worker or a warrior, which are female.

>>29576837
Si

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>>29573755
Hahaha, oh that was great Erf. Perhaps Anon even now realizes Chrysalis's path to redemption: intoxication.

As the clock turns midnight, so too does Anon's anus twitch. Sweetie Bell's constant belittling and wailing ins squeaky insult along with the dubstep bounding into his cranium of titanium grows distant.

Two more charges....

And with one fell swoop, he creates an artifact of power. The collar of extreme inebriation.

Nymous, drooling on herself lurched over a pile of Twilights collection of trysts on the finer points of making lists on a budget. She has no chance as anon creeps up on her grinning boldly at the lewd act to come.

Sweetie is so caught up in her latest lecture she barely notices, and notices far too late. Gasping at what anon is about to do.

It's only a trip and smash of his face onto the pile of books and the amulet of power is clamped around Nymous' neck.

She starts at the sudden discharge of action knocking her sleeping form loose to the floor.

And as she gets to her feet, she doesn't. She falls over and slams into the nearest book case, even more drunk than she was before.

Princess Celestia later found Anon's solution to be so apt she commissioned him to make several more of these collars of extreme inebriation, just in case some uppity villain was prime for friendship problems solved with brutal haste, and much drunken revelry.

In time, the ponies even got used to Nymous stumbling around, licking their faces and so forth. Sure, she couldn't count to potato anymore, but what a sport, what a friendly pony, what a perfect student for Twilight Sparkle.

>Dude, I’m so booooored! Why is this airship taking so long to get to Manehattan?! Ugh! I swear that I could go faster with just my wings! And why did they make me go in the first place?!
>I mean, this room is pretty and all, and I like that the carpet and wallpapers are red, just like blood! Now THAT’S cool! Not like the bunch of golden chairs and other fancy stuff that is all over the place
>But, MEH! You could paint everything in red and the room would still be boring! Mmmmmmmmmm…. what do I do…. What do I do… well… I can’t think of anything other than I really want to get out of this room and have some cold, morning air instead…
>I guess that it would be better if I get out of this room before I die from boringness… *sigh* at least the view is good… and is just because at least I know that we finally arrived to this stinky city!
>There’s nothing cool or exciting, or spooky about Manehattan! It’s just a bunch of really, really tall rectangles with lotsa windows on them and a bunch of ponies going around….
>Canterlot, is waaaay better, it has spooky myths and legends, and super old and super scary districts! This… this just has shopping malls and fancy hotels and grumpy ponies everywhere.
>And why couldn’t I stay with my Anonny? With my…. Eeep!
>W-Why do my cheeks always go red, and my heart beats like crazy w-when I think about him?! Stupid Anon, why do you always have to sneak into my thoughts with your stupid grin, and your stupid tail, and your cute face… And your awesome brain… and… by how much you make me feel like I’m the best pony in the world….
>AAAAH! Control, control, controlcontrolcontrolcontrol! I gotta have control… I… I miss him… but…
>As much as I don’t like it, my Anonny isn’t here… and I’m stuck instead with my dumb cousins Sapphire and Emerald who are always pickin’ a fight with me…

>>29577629
>There’s also my uncle Moon Stone and his wife Ruby Party… and they are snobby jerks that just think about bits… why couldn’t Anon come with me, Or Mr. Discord, or Sister Eris? Why my mom does always needs to be so busy with work?
>”Cherrywood! Oi, Cherrywood!”
“Huh? Uuuh… What do you two want?”
>And there they were… uuuuuuuuugh…. Coming out from the airship cabin… my dumb cousins…
>The first one to speak was always Sapphire, with her arrogant smile ”Tell us more about the prince! Does he have an embarrassing secret?”
>”Yeaaaah! Do ya know any hot gossip about him?” Of course, Emerald always had to follow her
>Why… of all my family… why did I have to get stuck with those two? They are always causing me trouble… or annoying me… and aaah! Why did they have to know that Anonny is my coltfriend!
“No… Anon doesn’t have an embarrassing secret! Stop being a pair of dummies and just… go away…”
>”Dummies?” Sapphire looked at Emerald
>”Says the weird freak with no friends! Emerald laughed… and that… that made me feel bad…
>I could feel my ears dropping and… man… I know that is not true anymore… the part about me not having friends… but… being called a weird freak… that always hurt…
>”Whatever, I still don’t know what the prince saw in you but now that we know he’s with you… we can take him all for us, right Emerald?”
>”Uh-Huh! That’s right Sapphire! Once he sees how high class we are, then the prince will leave this freak and will be our coltfriend instead!”
“What?!”
>You know… maybe I should listen to what Anon always tells me to do in these situations… that I need to keep calm and think things through and through… but… eeeeh… it was already too late for that kind of stuff
>Especially since I cornered both Emerald and Sapphire while hissing like a mad mare… well… at least I do kinda like hissing… it’s relaxing

>>29577640
“*HISSSS* If you don’t stay away from my Anon, then I will find a dragon, then I will tame her, and then I will tell her to burn your ugly faces, you wretched wraiths! *HISSSSSS*”
>Pffft! Now look at them! They are super scared and “Y-you see! T-The prince w-will never like somepony as scary as you!” - they still found a way to be a pair of jerks… I hate you, Emerald…
>”Y-Yeah! N-nopony can like somepony THAT crazy!” I hate you too Sapphire…
>But you know what?! They can hug a cactus! Because I ain’t going to let them have this!
“*HISSS* Oh yeah?! OH YEAH?! Yeah, I’m a weirdo! And a psycho! And a crazy pony! But guess what?! Anon likes me despite all of that! And you know what else?! He’s not only my coltfriend but he’s also my best friend! And that is something that you two will never have, because you are nothing but a pair of jerks!”
>Ugh… these two always gives me a headache… I… I need to get away from here…
>”Childreeeen! We are hee—eeeereee!” Ah… maybe I could have done that… if it wasn’t for my uncle who just told us that we are already landing on Manehattan…
>You know, my uncles always gave me the creeps…which is really something considering that my special talent is understanding and dealing with creepy and spooky creatures.
>My aunt looks like she could snap a hydra’s back in two, and is always wearing those ugly red dresses and funny hats…
>And my uncle… well… if he wasn’t always wearing those fancy suits and his super ugly moustache, he could honestly pass as a mare… a very ugly one, but a mare still.
>But… meh… the trip to my grandma’s house was the same as ever… go from the airship to the cab… “enjoy” the city of Manehattan in all of its boringness… go to the really tall building where my grandma lives… and finally, FINALLY, take the elevator to the frickin’ last floor!

>>29577727
>Maaan… what a boring trip, but at least grandma’s house is nice. I mean, it has a lot of trinkets from all the deep, dark corners of Equestria; it’s always dark and has this super scary vibe…
>And it is huuuge! And the view is nice too… not because I could see the entire city… ewww, Manehattan… nah, but the sea was always nice to see, just imagine how many monsters lives in there!
>I read once that the waters of the dragon lands have their own type of dragons… giant snake-like creatures, larger than even the dragon lord himself resting deep beneath the dark dragon ocean… and that’s sooo cool!
>Anon once told me that a long, long time ago, as in millions upon millions of years ago, the seas and oceans of his old world were populated by super scary and giant creatures that ate wales!
>And not only that, he told me that since his world had a bunch of crazy technology, ponies were able to explore the deep parts of the ocean where light never touches, and they always found creepy creatures….
>Can you believe that?! Having a bunch of awesome technology that is used to discover and study monsters! Dude, that is so rad! I soooo want to do that… maybe if I ask Mr. Discord….
>”Cherrywood… hey, Cherrywood…”
>”We could do this super fun adventure under the sea! Just Mr. Discord, Sister Eris, Annony and me! Oh… and can’t forget the giant monsters, kekeke~! It would also be cool if-
“AH!”
>W-Who the hay gave me that slap on my head?! Because when I find the pony who did it, then I’m gonna-! Oh-
>”CHERRYWOOD!” T-that icky perfume… that scary face… those weird jewels… oh no…
“H-Hi, grandma! H-How have you been?”
>Oh brother! Why did I get so side-tracked?! I mean, how in Equestria could I not notice that my grandma was here?!
> Anypony could smell that perfume from like a mile away… and she’s not exactly fast on her hooves… and those jewels that my grandma has all over herself makes a lot of noise when she walks... just… how…

>>29577746
>And grandma wasn’t looking very happy… ”Cherrywood Bellemare! Do you think that you come from a family of traveling merchants?! Show your education and say hi to your poor grandmother!”
“Eeeeh… hi?”
>”Cherrywood Bellemare!” Awww geez! I hate when ponies say my second name! I-I mean… I made grandma angry… again
“S-Sorry grandma… I mean!”
>Ugh… Sapphire and Emerald are laughing at me now… and my aunt and uncle are looking me like… well, like they always look at me… as if I was a criminal or something…
>Ahhh! Whatever, I’ll do that dumb tradition! Remember Cherrywood, always start with a bow and then the salute, and then the traditional hi or something…
“It is an honor to see you again, my dear grandmother Umbra Elegance, I hope that you have been well and that the moon has guided you in every step”
>”Terrible!” Aw please! But I said everything ri- “But can you blame this poor mare?! How do you think that I would feel when I haven’t seen you or your mother in months, hmmm?”
>”Oh, mom!” Ugh… and here comes my ugly uncle “Please don’t be so sad, I know that my big sis can be… a bit of a workaholic, but you will always have us at your side! You know that no matter, what, my wife and I will always be here for you, because you are our shining star in the sky! You occupy-!
>”Cut out with that, Moon Stone! I know why you are here, and the answer is the same as always: No! I won’t sign whatever ridiculous deal you came here to sweet talk me into!”
>Hah! Take that! I always love to see how my uncle’s plans falls apart, because he always, ALWAYS starts pleading like a spoiled foal “But mooooooom! This one is different! It is an amazing business venture with an actual member of royalty! Come on mom, give it a chance, please? Who knows, maybe we can get Luna involved with this and-“

>>29577755
>”HOW DARE YOU TO INSULT PRINCESS LUNA LIKE THAT?!” Aww, shucks… now this is the part where grandma gets reaaaally mad at my dumb uncle “How dare you to stain our precious legacy?! Do you even remember what this family was supposed to stand for?!”
>”Yesss, mooom…” and this is the part where my uncle groans and rolls his eyes like marbles “we are supposed to…”
>”Silence, you insolent fool! You know that for generations this family has sworn to serve Princess Luna! That we awaited her return for centuries! And now you dare to insult all of that by suggesting that she should take part in another one of your stupid deals?! I have had enough of you! Get out of my house, get out and don’t return until you have reflected on your actions!”
>”Very well mom…” Creepy… the glare that my uncle just gaveto grandma… it was super creepy “Family, let’s go… and you too, Cherrywood…”
>”No, Cherrywood shall stay with me, we have a lot to catch on, isn’t that right my dear child? Besides, I am afraid that if she spents too much time with you, then she will start thinking like a dumb business pony, rather than a proud member of this family” Well… I… how could I say no? I-I mean, uncle Stone is a professional jerk, and my grandma… well… it was obvious that she really didn’t want me to go…
>Sooo, I guess that this bye-bye for you, Uncle Stone!
“Uh-Huh! I’m staying with Grandma Umbra!”
>”Mother…” Uncle Stone let out a very heavy sigh… and for a moment… I swear that his eyes burnt with anger “Moonlight is doing her work in a faraway land, she let Cherrywood with us so we can take care of her, if we let her stay with you then…”
>”Then I shall write a letter to my daughter, letting her know that my dear granddaughter is safe with me, rather than being miserable with you… now, get out…”
>”Very well mother… we are leaving now…” Yay! It always made me happy to see those jerks go away!

>>29577768
> I certainly didn’t expect that Uncle Stone would be so dumb as to try to convince Grandma after last time… but well, I guess that it works for me! Still…
“Hey, Uncle Stone… before you go, who’s that member of royalty that you got a deal with?”
>”Hmph!” Eww, now that jerk was glaring at you “Prince Blueblood, why?”
>What?!
“KeKeKe~! Oh Uncle Stone! You can be a real dummy sometimes, you know? Princess Luna hates that Blueblood jerk! I dunno about Princess Celestia… she’s very, very mysterious about her feelings… OH! Princess Cadence also can’t stand that guy!”
>”What?! And you never said any of that until now?! You little-!” Eeep! You swear that Uncle Stone was going to smack you if it wasn’t for Grandma who stopped that dummy with one of her scary glares
>”Tell me Cherrywood, how comes that you know all of that?” Wait… Grandma was actually curious… okay…
“Well… because Princess Luna and Princess Cadence told me… I think that Princess Luna even told my mom that she shouldn’t allow Blueblood inside the castle…”
>”I see… another reason to discard that ridiculous deal…” Grandma patted my head… I-I kinda like when she does that and I also liked how she glared at Uncle Stone “Are you still here? Go away, already!”
>”Yes… mother…” Ugh, FINALLY! Those dummies finally left grandma’s home… and that means that now is only me and grandma Umbra…
“Weeeelll…What now?”
>”Cherrywood, my dear child…” Huh? How did she go from being at your side to the other side of this giant room?! How can she move like that if she’s soooo old?! “Would you like to take a cup of tea with your poor grandmother? I know that you don’t like my home very much, but I would love if we could spend some time together…”
“S-Sure! B-But… uuuh… could I have soda instead? I’m not that much into tea…”
>”Nonsense!” Eeeep! She got angry again! “Those kinds of drinks are unfit for a lady like yourself! Now, come here my dear child…”

>>29577780
>And so, grandma Umbra and I went from that huuuuge reception, to her little tea room… and I actually like this place! I remember that grandma, mom and I used to play here all the time… even dad joined sometimes too…
>After some maids brought the teapot, cups and aaall of that fancy stuff that I don’t care about, grandma Umbra served me a cup of tea… and as always, she didn’t allow me to put any sugar on it… “So, tell me my dear child, how’s your education going? Are you still practicing the piano?”
>Awww, shoot! Why did she always had to start with the hard questions?
“Errr... well… I’m doing good at school, but about the piano… I kinda stopped with that…”
>”Hmmm? And why would that be? Last time I attended to one of your recitals, it was clear for everypony that you were quite the rising star”
>Okaaay Cherrywood, don’t panic… don’t panic… even if some sweat running down my neck… don’t-err… oh what the hay… she was going to find out anyways
“You see… the teacher yelled at some of the new students for no good reason and I… scared her because she was mean…”
>”I see…” Oh, crackers… grandma Umbra is giving me that little glare of hers… she’s angry, dude! “So, would I be correct in assuming that you are not doing any extra-curricular activities at the moment?”
“Yes and no… I-I’m not going to piano lessons anymore… or painting lessons… or alchemy lessons, b-but my mom is training me! Y-You know, like how the members of our family are supposed to! A-And I actually like it!”
>”Cherrywood…” Awww, she sighed… grandma was disappointed “I suppose that I should start by saying that I am not mad at you, nor I am disappointed…” wait, what?! “I am merely worried about your well-being” Oh… “Moonlight has sent me letters detailing her struggles in balancing her job and her responsibilities as a single mother…”

>>29577791
>Huh… Grandma wasn’t looking at me… she just, had this blank stare “And believe me, Cherrywood, I know those burdens very well myself… I am familiar with the fact that even when one can do her very best… time is usually not enough, and because one has to bring food to the table, sometimes one can left her children without the attentions that she would want to give them … which is why I’m worried, worried about the happiness of you two.”
“Grandma, you see…”
>But Grandma shook her head and didn’t let me say another word ”Let me finish, please”
“O-Okay…”
>”Your mother’s letters also speak about you… and they paint you as a rather lonely girl. Cherrywood, I have no intents on dictating how you should live your life, but as I said… I am worried. I am worried that you have so few friends, especially when somepony your age should have as many friendships as there are stars in Princess Luna’s sky”
>Oh… that... she was worried that I was too much of a weirdo… eeeh…
“Grandma Umbra… I… well, thanks… I really like that you worry about me, but there’s no need for that, you know? Yeah, I have few friends… and yeah… I have my moments where I feel sad… but my friends are super cool, you know?”
>”Hmmm…” Yay! Grandma smiled! And it was a super warm smile too! “Alright, my dear child, I shall trust your word… but would you mind telling me more about your friends?”
>Oh…
“W-Well, I bet that you will be happy when I tell you that Princess Luna is my friend!”
>”Oh, thank heavens! The fact that Princess Luna is so kind as to bathe my most beloved ponies and our family with her friendship always warms my old heart. It means that she appreciates how much she has meant to our family, how her graciousness and elegance has inspired us for centuries”
>Yeah… I now know why mom never mentions that Princess Luna tends to forget things…

>>29577808
>”Tell me my dear child, since you and your mother are in so good terms with our beloved Princess Luna, am I correct in assuming that you also are acquainted with her heir?”
>Oh… Oh… we are going into that already… okay Cherrywood… keep calm… keep calm… keep-
>”Cherrywood? Are you feeling alright my dear child?”
“Y-Yes! O-Of course I feel alright! I feel great! W-Why do you ask, grandma?”
>”Because your face turned redder than the fires of the dragon lands when I mentioned the Princesses’ heir” W-Why was grandma giving me that funny look?! “Oh, I get it now, hmm-hmm-hmmm! So you DO know Princess Luna’s heir, don’t you?”
“I-I-I… w-w-well, yes I do know Anonny- Eeep!”
>Stupid, stupid, stupidstupidstupidstupidstupidstupid! Aaaaaah! Why did I say that?! N-Now grandma is gonna get angry! A-And she will tell me to-
>”Hmm-hmmm! So not only you are acquainted with him, but it also seems like you have feelings for him…” Wait… she giggled, why did she giggle! “I’m so happy for you my dear child…” W-W-WHAT?! “Tell me, have you told the Prince about your feelings, yet?”
“Y-Y-You see g-grandma, A-A-Anon i-is-“
>”Oh, Cherrywood! Just because he is a prince doesn’t mean that you shouldn’t at least try! If that Anon is truly Princess Luna’s son, then I’m sure that he has been taught to be humble and kind, just like her!”
“I-I know that! T-That’s part of why I like so much! A-And I don’t need to try because Anon is my special somepony already!”
>”Oh my! Cherrywood!” AAAH! Grandma got up from her seat and is now coming at me! Aaaaah!
“Eeep!”
>But… but grandma didn’t scold me, she… she hugged me… “I am so proud of you my dear child. You are growing up so fast, and you are starting to become a fine lady. And I couldn’t be happier that you and your mother have gotten so close to our beloved Princess Luna…”
“R-Really? You aren’t mad that I have a coltfriend?”

>>29577828
>”Of course not! Every filly has the right of falling in love. In fact, that is part of the most beautiful things about being as young as you. Discovering what love is, having your first kiss… those are some of the most precious moments that anypony could have…”
“Grandma…”
>”Yes, I know why you must have thought that I would have gotten angry. Truth to be told, I wasn’t the best mother that I could have been for Moonlight Shadow and Moon Stone. But I have learnt from my past mistakes… but you better introduce me to your special somepony”
“Y-Yes, grandma… and uuuh… thanks, for not being angry…”
>”Oh, Cherrywood…” Now Grandma was laughing, and I don’t know what is going on anymore… but I like it! “But say my dear child, now that we have gotten a little more intimate, I want to ask you something. Your mother’s letters have made me quite clear that you enjoy tales about the creatures that live in the deep, dark corners of Equestria, right?”
“Are you saying if I like spooky stuff? Because I LOVE THEM! I love reading and studying about monsters, and myths and legends, and about the everfree forest, and-“
>”I know, I know…” Grandma laughed again… but not to mock me, she looked… happy “That is why I wanted to share with you some of the old stories that our family used to tell when we still had the charge of protecting Hollow Shades…”
“Oooooh! That sounds soooo cool!”
>”That’s because it is. You see Cherrywood, the story that I’m about to tell you is about a creature that is as old as Manehattan. Some ponies say that it doesn’t exist. That this creature is just one of the many legends that this city has, but let me tell you, my dear child. The “weeping mare” is real, and she still haunts ponies to this very day”

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>>29577841
And that's it for today! I hope that you guys enjoy this first part. I am eager to see your opinions and criticism on it. Now, back to pirating the new Zelda!

>>29577858
Haven't read it yet but page 9 ain't fine

>>29577858
OK a skimmed a section before working out and goddamn Cherry is just too cute

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delivered

>>29578947
Marvelous
That cheerbloom a qt
So now you'll do >>29563676 next or can I request a drunk chrysalis in the filly form you drew before, based drawfag?

>>29578947
Fucking delivered indeed.
Nailed it.
10 points to Gryffindor

>>29578947

Next OP picture?

>>29579059
I agree

>>29578947
>Scrappy's face

there is no show of mercy in that face

>>29578979
I need a bit of a break I'm afraid. It's exam week right now.
I also have a lot of the story to catch up on still

>>29577858
On WiiU? Heard it was running like shit for now.

>>29579704
I don't know if that's good or bad. I have the WiiU version coming and I'm trying not to get hyped

>>29579075
a cold and calculated strategist

>>29579769
Fuck

>>29577640
>why my mom does
why does my mom

>>29580000
Eeh, you can thank word for thar kind of stuff

>>29577841
That filly is seriously into PhD

>>29548674
That pic looks like the title card from a retarded sitcom. I love it.

>>29573755
>"Oh boy, she's really out of it" Sweetie Belle said as she approached Chrysalis and dared tapping her side
>"No I'm not. Also dooon't poke unless you wanna get poked" Chrysalis pokes back at her side and grins "You're soft. Like a marshmellow." she giggles "I like you already, you'd make a good pillow"
>"Pillow?! What?! I'm learning to be a better singer and get better with my magic. I'm a lot better than a pillow!" Sweetie Belle took offense to Chrysalis's words. Pillow? She wasn't a pillow, especially for changeling scum.
>"Riiiiight. Oh..and then there's...YOU!" Chrysalis lunges forward suddenly,Grabbing onto Scootaloo.
>"W-WAHHH! HELP!" Scootaloo cries as you all jump back in surprise.
"Chrysalis! W-what are you.........wut?"
>Surprise turns into a glaring stupor as you gaze upon Chrysalis cuddling onto Scootaloo.
>""Oh hush little chicken. I'm not going to hurt you. I'm going to snuggle you. Snuggle you good. I had a dream once. A dream of having a pet chicken. I thought it was soooooooo dumb, me having a pet chicken? Absurd.. But now? suddenly....it feels so right. I want one...foreveeeerrr" She was just...cuddling her. It was scary.
>Scootaloo just looked upon you all in pure horror as she whispered "hhhhheeeellllpppp meeeeeeee"
>"Let er go! What are ya doing to her?!" Applebloom barked at her. She tries to grab onto Scootaloo's hoof. But Chrysalis pulls her away.
>"Uhhhh, cuddling her. a doi! You all can be so dense I swear. Just look at her" Chrysalis holds her up like a cat. Scootaloo was trembling. trying to summon up her bravery. But being so close to Chrysalis. It crippled her mentally. "She's loving this. Probably more attention than she gets from her parents anyway. Does she even have parents? If she does, I guess they don't worry about her too much if I can always get this close to her."

>>29580611
"Chrysalis, c-c'mon, don't you think you cuddled her enough?"
>"Nope...and there's nothing none of you can stop me! And! Her name is Caramel by the way. Isn't that right Caramel, you're so cute. We could rule the world together as you wake me up every morning to witness the suffering of ponies everywhere." She continued to hug and snuggle on poor Scootaloo
>"Erm, actually. Roosters are the ones that crow every mornin'. Not chickens" Applebloom felt some sort of southern need to correct her.
>"Whatteevvverrr, same thing really" Chrysalis shrugged
>"Applebloom! can you not help her with your farm facts and help me! What if somepony comes and sees and HELLO RARITY!"
>Scootaloo froze then waved with a terrified smile on her face as Rarity approached the group.
>Shit...
>"Hello, ohhh what is this?" Rarity giggled "are you all having a little party here within the party we are having? I must say, that's an interesting way to go about doing things. How has all your nights been?" With Rarity out of the loop, she just saw this as a sort of meeting between friends.
"Oh um, it's been great. We're all a little out of it due to all the partying and dancing and stuff. Right girls?"
>"Oh ummm, yeah" Sweetie Belle agrees
>"Yep, that's right" Applebloom nods with a false smile
>"Well, I on the other hoof feeeeeel fantastic! Rarity, have yah, have you met my new chicken?" She holds Scootaloo up to her as Scootaloo falsely smiles and waves "I call er Caramel."
>"Oh, um, yes. I see it. Is...this a sort of game?" Rarity asked, now utterly confused "And are you alright sweetie? You look a tad peckish"
>"Game?" Chrysalis asked, confused
"YEAH! ITS A GAME! A GREAT GAME! HAHAHA" You laughed as loud as you could to make it seem as genuine as possible.

>>29580643
>"A-alright. erm..ahrm" Rarity composed herself after being caught offguard from your sudden laughter "Anyway, I came to tell you all we'll be playing "pin the tail on the pony" soon, and of course Nymous will be the first to play, given this party is being thrown for her. Will you all be ready soon? I could ask Pinkie to put on another song if you all need more time"
>"Whhhat? nah nah nah" Chrysalis immediately drops Scootaloo onto her butt as she approaches Rarity, shaking her head at the entire prospect of putting on another song. "I wanna play like, riiiight now. Because, I already know I'm gonnnnaa win. er, what do I win if I win"
>Rarity now found her attitude rather strange as she saw Chrysalis lurch and stagger a little in her steps "Well, first. Let me say that it is nice to see competitive spirit in you. But darling, this is just a party. The only thing you'll win is the cheers of the other ponies due to a display of skill and such. Are you sure you're alright?"
>"Ah said I'm fiiine. Also" Chrysalis points to the still practicing Rainbow Dash "If that's all we're gonna win then why is she trying so hard? why would anypony try so hard just for that?"
>"Well, that's just Rainbow Dash being Rainbow Dash. She just likes to win. Though, if you ask me, sometimes it's good for her to lose. Excessive winning usually has a habit of overextending that ego of hers." Rarity points out as she looks back at Rainbow Dash.
>"Ya dooooon't say. Well, don't worry then. Because I'll make sure that ego of hers don't overextend at all. "
>Scootaloo immediately snapped to attention after recovering from her drop. Rainbow Dash. Losing? Nooope.
>"As if, Rainbow Dash always wins. And I happen to know she's actually pretty darn good at this game. You don't stand a chance!" Scootaloo yelled out, determined to see her idol win.

>>29580669
>"Scootaloo! Don't be rude. Nymous has a very frail sense of self that I will not have shattered over something as simple as a game. We should encourage her to do well. Not exclaim that'll she'll lose" Rarity berated the young pegasus, feeling her outburst was wrong.
>"B-but" Scootaloo's ears drooped. She wanted to tell her the truth as to why she said it. But she knew she couldn't.
>"No buts. Nymous, I'm so so sorry about that. I personally think that you have a very good chance of winning." Rarity says, trying to be supportive.
>"It's ok. She's fine. it's fine. everything is fine. Say Rarity, you like dresses, don't ya?" Chrysalis asked as she wrapped her right hoof over her
>"W-well, yes." Rarity had no idea what was going on with her right now. She very carefully placed her hoof on Chrysalis's head, but felt no fever "Nymous, are you absolutely sure you're alright?"
>"Yep, but look. Here me out. Because yer gonna like this one. So, imagine black dresses...NO! Black suits. Like, spy suits but made for fashion. some can even be hybrid suits and dresses, all mostly black. It'd be daring, bold, dark, mysterious. Mares wearing these would seem much more than what they are. It'd make them hard to approach, and yet oh sooooo desirable. Shooting a glare into any stallion's eyes would be like piercing their heart." Chrysalis planted her hoof right into her chest "Right here, it would beat loudly for the mare that they could never catch"
>"Hmmmmm" Rarity thought, that didn't sound to bad to her. "I never thought about making anything like that. Dark and mysterious, yes, that is quite thrilling to be honest. I know there are mares out there who at least like to pretend that there is a sense of danger and intrigue in their lives. I think I could make this work. But, what would we call the line?"
>"Oh that's easy. You can just call it "The Dark". Pretty good, eh?" Chrysalis seemed to like her own idea so much she was smiling wide when she said it.

>>29580725
>" "The Dark", hm. Well, I could use that as a working title to be sure. Once I have some free time, I'll take a stab at it" It seems Rarity actually took the whole idea seriously.
>"I bet you will, and it will be gloooorious. hehe" Chrysalis let out a cute little giggle as she looked over at the party goers, it seems some latin song was playing because she could see Discord leading a conga line.
>When you looked, you smiled. Smiled for him. Because he was having a blast with the other ponies. It did your heart good.
>"Well, I better let everypony know you're all ready. When the song is over, come by the pony poster and we'll get you set up. And remember Nymous, it doesn't matter whether you win or lose. In the end, you're still a marvelous lady." Rarity gives her a sweet smile as she does a near immediate touch up to Chrysalis's mane. "There we are, it was a little frazzled." And with a tiny giggle, she went off to alert Pinkie you'd all be ready soon.
>"Now how do you like that. A whole line of clothes inspired by me" Chrysalis has a chuckle about it all "....I hope I get one of those for free."
"Can't you just, I dunno, just change into the clothes you want with your magic?"
>It did seem odd to you that she would be thrilled about all this. Was she really that wrecked in the head? Really?
>".....oh...oh right. I could do all that, couldn't I? hrnnnnn" Chrysalis let's herself drop to the side "I bet it's not even going to look super evil or nothen."

>>29580796
>"My sister would never make anything evil looking. You should be happy though, if she does do it. It's gonna be better than anything you could do with your magic!" Sweetie Belle felt she had to stand up for her sister, she didn't want Chrysalis to think she was any kinds of better than Rarity.
>"And how would you know that? Tch, WATCH THIS!" Chrysalis stood up and made grunting noises, shirking her head left and right. But nothing was happening.
>"What am I supposed to be seeing?" Sweetie Belle was confused.
>You just put your hoof to your face.
'She's trying to transform"
>"That's rrrright. Why isn't it working?" She continued to struggle trying to change her form. But to no avail, she just couldn't do it.
"Uhhh, because of that curse Discord put on you, remember?"
>"...........oh right" Chrysalis sighed and rolled her eyes "I guess you win this time Swatty Biggs"
>"...Sweetie Belle, C'mon, it's not that hard to remember" Sweetie Belle didn't want any villain getting her name wrong. once was already enough.
>"I dunno, I'm having trouble remembering things right now. It feels kind of good, but also kind of bad. what were we going to do again?" She looked a little dizzy as she tried to remember what was about to happen.
"Play, "pin the tail on the Pony". Geez Chrysalis. I'm telling you, just sit this one out. This could be bad for everypony involved."

>>29580862
>"Bad? Then that's good.. Leeeeet's do it" She cheers as she begins to step forward
>"Anon, does being drunk really make you act all goofy? Or is she just fakin' it? I kinda feel bad for her, really bad. It's like she's actually capable of bein' all good and stuff sorta" Applebloom asked as she watched Chrysalis drunkily step and shake back towards the party.
"No, she isn't faking it. And yeah, I really think she could be good. But, it looks like it really isn't happening today."
>You tried, but you botched it. You knew you botched it. Even drunk, she was an asshole. And given how out of her mind she was. She might not even remember most of this.
>The rest of you follow. Ready for the final moments of the party to end. If anything good came out of this so far. It was helping out Discord. He really did look happy in that conga line.

>>29580611
>>"Pillow?! What?! I'm learning to be a better singer and get better with my magic. I'm a lot better than a pillow!" Sweetie Belle took offense to Chrysalis's words. Pillow? She wasn't a pillow, especially for changeling scum.

This is kind of redundant and I don't get who is talking in the second part of the clause.
It's Anon narrating or Sweetie Bell talking?

>>29580873
how do you write every second of your life

Page nine

>>29581392
>Pillow?! She wasn't a pillow
>She wasn't a pillow
>She wasn't
>She
Unless you have a problem where you can't make connections, it is crystal clear that is a narration, not a dialogue. Sometimes you can be dumb, grammar-kun

>>29582061
Si

>>29580611
>>29580643
Both of these were really cute. Marshmallow and chicken.
Chrissy being cute.
It made me chuckle

>>29582061
>grammar-kun
Are you giving names to people now? Names to the wrong people at that?

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>>29580873
drunk chrysalis my fetish now
i want to cum inside a giggly and goofy drunk chrysalis

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>>29577858
I liked the perspective switch, the grandmother playing the part of the belophile/queen of darkness/nachos without beer/other prime evils from Cheerys' frantic perspective was adorable.

Even chinch would be pleased.

>>29580873
Hahaha, that was great. Muh little chicken, Caramel. How the CMC were reacting to Chrysalis just being silly was great. LIke a bunch of small dogs yipping that they don't feel irrelevant.

Lucky for Sweetie Belle, Chrysalis neglected to inform her of the the treatment Pillows get in in Discord's house under Anon's care.

>>29582660
Indeed. Clowning around with a drunk Nymous, trolling ponies, triggering Twilight-- what's there not to like?

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>>29582997
Man Eqg content just makes me go blind, even in thumbnail

After a week I have updated the pastebin, I'm a slow turtle
http://pastebin.com/w3Fwdhvt
Question remains onto what direction this story shall take, some anons said it went edgy... but in my head I have this Discord as the zero-fuck villain who doesn't care if shit happens
I'm in despair

Also I'll write once I'm done with some dumb university stuff

>>29583401

Whatever you write it's gonna be great, I believe in you!

>>29583812
You're delusional.

>>29583832

U r a faget

>>29580873
I really liked that update Erf

>>29583832
Anne Hiro

>>29582997
Glad you liked the perspective switch. I hope tgat this is an overall sentiment tho

>>29584601
It took a few beers but I get it now

>>29583812
>>29583832
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yd8cdXI4ZsY

>>29583401
It did go a little edgy, you should work on the tone. But othee than that it has been a fun ride, and I want to see more of it

new to the thread and going on an archive binge. which one should i read first?
also: damn, Erf, you write a fuckton of green.

>>29587038
I do, and once i finish eating. I'll write some more. As for who to read first. that all depends on you,

most of the stories are written by people in which english is NOT their first language

>>29587038
I should add to this >>29587047 every story including erf's has terrible grammar and typos. Only Ben and Gumball are exempt of this, but Ben updates once every blue moon and Gumball is fucking dead.

>>29587047
that's unique. most other green threads don't have this trait. I wonder what draws non-english speakers to this prompt more than others.

>>29587047
>most of the stories are written by people in which english is NOT their first language
Which I will never understand why someone with a tenuous grasp of the English language at best would be writing novel length stories in English.

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>>29587065

Because as long as it's enjoyable. I don't care.

I do it for free, also, i write every night. it's not like i have an editor to fix all this while i'm at work. It's the best i can do. I drink a shitton of soda and write while out of my mind to even get this shit out

>>29587072
Can't wait for tonight's episode

>>29587072
Dont forget the eggs

>>29580873
>"Alright everypony! It's the game you've all been waiting for! Pin the tail on the Pony! Now you know the rules, the game ends if somepony gets the tail right on that itty bitty target or when all ponies have tried to pin their tail ON THAT itty bitty mo bitty target. Now remember, Nymy is our guest of honor so she gets to go first, then the foals, then the adults." Pinkie said as she walked over to a barrel of tails and grabbed one for herself, and then held it up with a blindfold "Also, remember, you're gonna be blindfolded and span around for a bit. So I hope nopony gets motion sick. Hrnnn...Nymy! Oh Nyyymmmy! Where are you? We're all ready to play!" Pinkie called out to Chrysalis, scanning the room for her
>Rainbow Dash snickered as she eyed the target of the poster. "This ain't gonna be hard. I got this in the bag for sure!"
>"Ya mean like the thousand tries where you ain't pinned it at all?" Applejack gave her an arrogant smirk
>"That was p-p-practice. This? This is for real...just watch" Rainbow Dash leaned forward, grinning as she eyed the target with fierce determination "All I gotta do is memorize where that target is and I'll win for sure"
>"Uh huh, sure thing Rainbow, sure thing" Applejack rolled her eyes and looked on ahead, finding Rainbow Dash's arrogance a tad too much.
>"Yooooo! Pink, Nymous is here. Right here....r-right.....right...hold on...hold on..need to pass by these other ponies. Oops, nearly tripped on that foal, missed his head...drat..erm...uhhh...hold on...hold on.....ok....right..here i am...let's do it" Chrysalis drunkily crossed through the entire crowd, stumbling around pass everyone until she finally stood before Pinkie.
>You just followed along, goddammit. it felt like it was getting worse by the minute. You realllllyy hoped she didn't drop dead. That would just be awful. the CMC followed you as you all stopped within the crowd.

>>29587072
it's only tolerable if i know your english will improve throughout the story. i imagine that someone writing that many words in english would give them a better grasp on the language, but I don't want to be disappointed.

>>29587258
>"Anon, it looks like she's in a whole other world. Like she's completely different. I...kinda wanna try being drunk too. Y'know, if she can have that much fun from it. Imagine what we could do" Sweetie Belle suggested, she didn't like Chrysalis, but seeing her act so goofy and fun made being drunk seem appealing to her in a certain way.
>"Ah dunno Sweetie Belle, ah think she might be fakin' it. Being drunk doesn't sound like it'd change anypony that much." Applebloom was in doubt, she didn't trust chrysalis at all.
>"I'm with Applebloom. If bug breath is ok with it, then I'm not" Scootaloo just felt pure anger when Chrysalis was around.
"Trust me, she isn't faking it. But also, egh, trust me Sweetie Belle. You don't wanna be drunk"
>Dammit, you sucked this. Why did you give Chrysalis that drink? It was just a bad influence at this point. Sweetie Belle, c'mon, you're just a kid. Dammit, why would she even ask to be drunk?!
>"Why not? It looks like it changes the way you see everything. I'm not liking what Chrysalis is doing but. She'd doing things I don't think she'd ever normally do and is having fun doing it. Could you imagine how useful it'd be to be drunk during something boring like being at a museum or something? It'd be neat!"
>Ohhh,Sweetie Belle, don't be dense. DON'T BE DENSE.