Reverse-trap/Tomboy Thread №??

first for fucking girls pretending to be boys

jefe were r u

>>29068100
Will he ever come back?

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>>29067382
Previous Thread
>>28920846

Oh cool, this thread is back.

>>29068213
By Celestia's blessing he will return.

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Oh, awesome, this is back. Sorry for disappearing from the last one. Got super distracted from writing by finals and other real-life shit. But yeah, Butters will be back tonight.

>>29069472
HE RETURNS!!! AND WITH UPDATES!!!!

>http://pastebin.com/GGCZjdDX
Cool story. Not at all what I was expecting, but a neat little read nonetheless.

>>29070119
>saging your post
pretty sneaky, sis, but not when this threads made a return

glimmer spam killed the last thread

>>29070135
Sorry, I'm setup for sage by default. Not really a post worth bumping over anyways.

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http://pastebin.com/GGCZjdDX

>Over 4k views

Not as many as some stories, but still, it really means a lot to me that this story has stuck with people this much. Thanks to everyone who's followed this story for so long, and I hope it continues to resonate with you as it draws to its conclusion.

>You and Dash are left in sort of a somber, but still peaceful silence
>She watches out the window, relaxing in her next of blankets and pillows
>You scoot closer to her, squeezing her hand
>"You know, this has been pretty cool. Rescuing Butters, and all."
"You think?"
>"Of course, dude. It's like being on a real adventure. I mean, shit, how many times did we almost die?"
"That's... honestly a good question."
>"I know, right? It's been *so* badass. And, well... no matter where we end up, I'm really happy this all happened."
"For real? I mean, you kinda got stabbed..."
>"Worth. Totally worth. Plus, I'm gonna a fucking *wicked* scar now."
>She pulls up her shirt to show you the bandages winding around her waist
>"Like, come on. Spitfire's never gonna out-brag me about how tough she is again. No matter how many laps she can run, her British-aircraft ass is never gonna be able to top this."
>She pokes the bandages, making herself wince
"Ha. If you say so."
>Out of nowhere, you're seized by the desire to hug Dash
>And so you do, wrapping her skinny, bandages frame between your arms and pulling her against your chest
>"Uh... where's this coming from?"
"You're amazing, Dash. I want you to know that."
>"Yeah? I mean, I'm aware of that, dude..."
"No, for real. If I do end up going with Butters, I want you to know--"
>Dash puts a finger against your lips, cutting you off
>"Dude, I promise. I already know."

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>>29070528
>Leaving Dash for Butters
Oh god man my feelings

>>29070528
>implying butterball is going to just let him leave dash for her

>>29070528
I'm glad I threw up this thread before work

I was worried people would just get pissy because I half assed the OP

>>29070528
>You will never have a baby boy with Dash
>You will never have a baby girl with Butters
It hurts.

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>>29070528
"I know you know. But it's still nice to say."
>"You're such a sap, you know that?"
>Dash nuzzles up against you, resting her head on your shoulder
"I'm vaguely aware."
>She giggles, her breathing slowing as the two of you watch the sun pinwheel down towards the horizon
>As it begins to set, radiating purple-orange light across the sky, Fluttershy returns
>She's got a bottle of coke in one shaking hand, and Dash's ID card in the other
>"S-sorry it took so long. I k-kinda got lost, and all the hallways look the s-same, and... yeah..."
>She crosses the room to Dash's bed, her eyes on the floor
>Judging by the blush on her cheeks, and the conspiratorial sort of "we're on the same wavelength" look Dash gives her, you're pretty sure Fluttershy knows exactly what the two of you were just talking about
>Dash raises her head from your shoulder, and winks
"What?"
>She whispers into your ear:
>"C'mon. Ask her out."
>You whisper back:
"What, here?"
>"Yes, here. I wanna watch."
"You are..."
>A vaguely-hungry grin spreads across Dash's face
>"I'm what?"
"You're one-of-a-kind."
>"Damn straight. Now go on!"
>Dash slaps your ass as you stand up from the hospital bed, and approach Fluttershy
>She shivers slightly as she hands Dash the soda and ID card
>"Uh, h-hey, Anon... h-how's it going?"
"Hey, Butters. I was, uh, wondering if you'd like to--"
>"Y-y-yeah, I'd totally like to go out with you t-tonight!"
>Fluttershy blinks, her face beet-red and sweaty
>"I mean, uh... if t-that was what you w-were gonna ask... heh..."

>>29070821
just put your balls right on my tongue, senpai

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>>29070821
maaan

bimp

>>29071759

>>29072297

>>29072383

Y'all are waiting fer jeff?
Is there any other writefag?

>>29073592
Si, Jefe is love, ese'.

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>>29073592
There were some others, but I think they've kinda disappeared now.

We'd really appreciate some new content, though.

>>29070821
"Well, uh..."
>You glance back at Dash, who gives you a *very* enthusiastic thumbs-up
"I guess that settles that. Any idea where you want to go?"
>"Anything you w-want is fine, but, uh..."
>She folds her hands together behind her back, fingers fidgeting with the hem of her sweatshirt
>"We didn't r-really get a chance to do much, the l-last time we went to the zoo. So, if you'd be alright with it, I'd r-really like to t-take you there, again..."
"Yeah, sure. And maybe after that, we can come back here, and--"
>Dash mimes for you to shut up
>You look back at her, confused, only to see her mouth "alone"
"I mean, uh... maybe we could go back to my house? And, you know, watch movies or something."
>Dash beams at that idea
>This time, you get *two* enthusiastic thumbs up
>"Y-yeah! That sounds r-really great! Just, um... c-can we try not to watch something s-sad, this time?"
>She tugs at the back of her sweatshirt, stretching the front of it across her chest
>"I mean, if y-you want to, we can, but um... I'd r-rather not spend the night crying on your floor... again..."
"Ha, no. Don't worry, I've got an idea for what we can watch. I think you'll really like it."
>A relieved smile spreads across Fluttershy's face, and Dash perks up
>"Is it Bee Movie!?"
"No, Dash, it's not fucking Bee Movie."
>Dash crosses her arms
>"Hmph. Well it *should* be Bee Movie."
"We can watch Bee Movie when you get out of here."
>"Oh, sick! We totally can!"
"Speaking of that, though..."
>You drop your voice a bit
"Will you be okay being here, you know, alone? While I go out with Butters?"

>>29073592
We would love another writefag if you can.
The other one we had got chased away for writing trap instead of reverse trap.
Too bad, I really enjoyed his story of Scootaloo and martial arts adopted Indian Anon.

>>29074100
>>29074098

Oh that fighting-styled stories. I remember.
I can try but no promises tho. I have been burnt out since the last time i wrote here

>>29074126
Is this you A-naan?
Or the one with Space Gilda?
>>29074098
Also Mr. Mango, will you be continuing your Coco story after you finish Butters?

>>29074166
nah. Twilight and a bit of octav

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>>29074098
>"Dude."
>Dash points to the laptop next to her bed
>"The minute you're out of the room, I'm going back to my nonstop Yuri On Ice binge."
"Right. Of course."
>"I've got free snacks and enough torrented anime to last me for weeks. Don't worry about me."
>She kicks back, nuzzling up into a cozy little ball beneath the blankets
>"Plus, Spitfire'll probably be by again."
"Oh, Jesus. Does she know about the Spitfire wig?"
>"Uh... n-no, that'd be *so* weird..."
>Dash tries to look innocent
"Riiiight..."
>You take ahold of Fluttershy's hand, which makes both her and Dash blush
>Fluttershy from embarrassment, Dash from near-childlike glee
>Man, you wish you were as easily-entertained as her
"I'll text you when we get back, alright? If you want us to stop by--"
>Dash shakes her head
>"Don't worry about me, man. I've got my night planned. Just, you know, enjoy yourselves for a bit. I'll see you tomorrow, alright?"
>You and Dash exchange a quick hug
>She squeezes you a little longer than usual before letting go, nuzzling her cheek against yours
>And then you and Fluttershy head off, leaving her to... well, whatever the hell Dash gets up to on her own

>>29073592
AJ anon still lurking on suicide watch

Gotta run to take care of some errands. Date shenanigans starting tonight.

>>29074582
Well I'm significantly hyped.

>>29074578
We need a side-story of what Dash does while Anon and Butters are gone.

>>29075887
She's just gonna furiously masturbate to the thought of anon and butters together, sweaty and naked in the showers, after a long session of broing.

>>29075997
I'd still read it.

>>29074582
can't wait my dude

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>>29074582
>date shenanigans

Sorry, wasn't able to update tonight. Will have date shenanigans out in the morning.

>>29077675
Jeff pls
you hurt me

>>29077937
It hurts so good.

Bampu.

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>>29077937
Yeah, sorry. Trying to get back home to visit my family and the weather is an icy hell-nightmare.

Will definitely have a lot of content out, since today's a day off, but yeah. Might take a while. Sorry about the delays

>>29078949
And we wait patiently.

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>>29079277

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>>29074578
>>You take ahold of Fluttershy's hand, which makes both her and Dash blush
kek
gives me a giggle

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>>29078949

>>29080094
That pic is adorable.

>>29078949
Delays understood mango man.

>>29079277

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NEET 8UMP

Not dying right now

>>29074578
I'm reading this in the pastebin now, after that NEET Luna story captured me originally. So much comfy.

I really like it.
I love the fujoshi girlfriend angle, and how well RD being a secret geek fits the canon.

At the zoo.
I've been hurt before (by Faggot13, specifically) but I keep waiting for the other boot to drop and everything to become pain.

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>>29083572
Great to hear, hope you continue enjoying it!

>>29074578

"Are, uh... are you okay, Butters?"
>"Y-yeah, I'm f-f-fine! Not nervous at all! This is n-not big deal, heh... heheh..."
>Fluttershy sticks her hands in the pockets of her sweater, hunching over
>Since it's a Friday afternoon, the zoo is pretty crowded, and the line to get in is taking absolutely forever
>For a Fall day, the temperature is surprisingly warm, and there's a general golden haze of late-afternoon permeating the animal statues that flank the entrance to the zoo
>Despite the warmth, however, Fluttershy is shaking
>You bump her with your elbow, making her jump
>"G-gah!"
>She notices you're concerned expression, and quickly tries to backpedal
>"S-sorry. I p-promise, I'm n-not nervous or anything."
"You sure?"
>"C-completely sure! B-b-because this isn't like, you know, a date-date. Even though D-Dash kinda said it was, but... it's s-still not a big deal! I'm t-totally fine and don't feel s-so scared I'm g-gonna pass out!"
>She starts tapping her fingers together in front of her face, looking terrified
>"I'm t-totally not worried... not worried..."
>A small smile plays across your lips as you take hold of your hand
>In your grasp, it trembles like a terrified little mouse
"You've got nothing to worry about."
>"But I d-do! I'll p-probably say something stupid, or be boring, or w-weird, or..."
>She hangs her head, her cropped hair barely able to hide her eyes
>"T-this is the only time I've ever g-gotten to be with someone like this. You know, on like a d-date. A real d-date. I don't want to m-mess it up, because if I do... I p-p-probably won't get another chance.'

>>29083625
Take her to the reptile house so she can see your snake

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>>29083636
That comes ;^) later.

>>29083625
"Mess it up?"
>In spite of yourself, you start laughing
>"S-stop! I'm b-being serious..."
"I know, I know. I am to, I promise. Do you have any idea what my first date with Dash was like?"
>"Amazing?"
"Are you kidding? I took her to the Canterlot Fair. We rode the Xcavator six times. And then she threw up on me."
>"O-oh my."
"Yeah. And you know what she did after that?"
>"I have n-no idea. She must have been s-so embarrassed."
"Dash? Embarrassed. Hello no, she laughed at me. Because I apparently looked really stupid, covered in cotton-candy vomit."
>"T-that's terrible! And... it k-kinda sounds exactly like something Dash would do."
>Fluttershy's face is pale and her brow is sweat-streaked, but she still manages to smile
"Oh, it was some classic Dash. But, you know, as gross and humiliating as that was, it's still one of my best memories."
>As you and Fluttershy reach the front of the line, you tighten your grip around her hand, feeling her fingers intertwine with yours
"Because, if you're spending the day with someone you really like, you can make anything fun. Even if it is gross, or crazy, or embarrassing."
>Together, the two of you step under the arched entrance
"I really like you, and no matter what, I'm glad we're here together. So don't worry, alright."
>Fluttershy mumbles something under her breath, walking as if in a trance
>She leans against you, resting her head on your shoulder as she leads down the zoo's main ath

>>29083786
hnnnnnng

>>29083786
Sacrifice her to Harambe

>>29081663

>>29083572
>>29083625
You asshole. I was supposed to have sleep, and now I'm caught up.

Much less terrible than I was worried, though I do feel slightly violence blue-balled by Anon never getting to recite sweet poetry in the language of agony to I mean punch out FlutterDad.

Right from his very first appearance my thinking was "He's waving a knife in my direction; this could be constructed as assault with a deadly weapon. If I take it from him and kill him with it, would Butters back me up on how threatening he was?"

Not real criticism, but the /k/ part of my autism is triggered by the knee shot; in the real world, if a cop takes a shot, it's intended to be a lethal one. (Or is Gilda just a bad shot?)

My poor heart is breaking at the notion of Dash basically breaking it off with Anon so he can be with Butters. Oh Rainbow, you're so pure yourself.


Finally, the scene with Anon and Dash in Ms Harshwinny's home (the fujoshi role-playing her yaoi butt fun fantasy) is not even the bulls eye, but like the triple-20 for my fetish.
Thank you very much.
if only the medication did not mean my libido was kill

>>29084792
GLaD you are enjoying the ride just like us.

>>29083625
>take ahold of your hand
Her hand*

>>29084000
trips demand a sacrifice

>>29085256
Can't we just snuggle?

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>>29084792
Hah, yeah, I probably could have put in a well-deserved beat 'em up scene in there. But I'm glad to you've enjoyed what was in the pastebin. You've joined in on the story just in time to see it wrap up, pretty much.

>>29084906
Thanks. I'll fix that in the paste.

>>29083786

>So, the last time you ended up at the zoo with Fluttershy, she was a little subdued do to fear and the nervousness of being around you and Dash
>Now that both of those have faded, though, holy shit
>You were not prepared for this level of excitement
>The minute you get to the first exhibit -- a walled in mound of dirt, supporting a network of prairie dogs -- she sprints towards it, dragging you by the hand
>"Oh my g-gosh! Look, look!"
>She pulls you up to the wall, all signs of anxiety about the date gone from her face
>Instead, she's practically glowing with excitement, rocking back and forth on her heels as she watches the furry little critters skitter across their home
>"Look h-how cute they are! Oh..."
>She claps one hand over her mouth, letting out a tiny squee
>The other hand, of course, remains firmly clasped against yours
>"S-so adorable..."

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>>29085888
blood sugar levels reaching coma inducing

>>29085888
>Wrap up
Jeff are you trying to tell us something here buddy?

>>29085925
Don't cry.
Coco is up right when this is done.

>>29086706
Does the coco story have a bin?

>>29086757
Pretty sure it's somewhere in Jeff's library of greens.

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>>29086757
It didn't, but here's on I just set up for it.

http://pastebin.com/RjphWn0q

Don't expect the story to ever go anywhere. It's just been random ideas that popped into my head so far.

>>29087575
Damn if only.

>>29088611

Yo, neet luna or psycho ponk ever gonna be updated?

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>>29085888
"They're pretty cute, I'll give you that."
>One of the little guys pops out of the top of his hole and looks over at you
>It's probably just your imagination, but you swear he's glaring at you
>Probably offended that your compliment wasn't as overblown as Fluttershy's
>You stick your tongue out at the dude, and he disappears back into the dirt
>"You know w-why they call them prairie dogs?"
"Because they suck?"
>You hope he heard that
>"W-what?"
"Nothing. Why?"
>"B-because, if you make them mad, they make this l-little sound that sounds like a dog bark. It's s-super cute."
"Hah, I bet."
>Fluttershy points to the plaque on the enclosure
>"See t-the latin name? Cynomys. It c-comes from the Greek word for 'dog-mouse.'"
"Oh my god. That's actually really cute, holy shit."
>"I k-know, right? And what I t-think is really cool, is..."
>Fluttershy pauses for a moment, staring at the network of tunnels
>"They l-live in these big cities made out of t-tunnels. They must b-be really confusing for a tiny little guy. So they all m-make sure to stick close to their families. When a mommy and a d-daddy have kids, the m-mommy watches them, and they all s-stay together like a family. Even in these big t-tunnels, they s-stick together."
>She squeezes your hand tighter, leaning up against me
>"And t-that makes me really happy. They're s-so cute, and I'm g-glad they get a nice home."

>>29089305
muh heart

she cannae take much more

>>29089305
bump for more cute Butters

>>29089568

>>29090537
aaayyy

>>29090676
l-lamo?

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Where's that guy and his reverse trap rarity green, nigga shoulda ran with that.
>tfw no darlingbro

>>29091911
Probably with the Anon who wrote the Reverse-Vynal Scratch prompt.
I'll never forget hotty treehugger

>>29091911
That was me. I can bring it back, now that I've got a bit more time to write.

Going to be out for most of tonight. Will have updates out when I get back. See you all then.

live

>>29094816

>>29095619

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>>29092847

>>29095913

jefe pls

Bleh, sorry about that. Quick bump, updates starting now.

So....how about this weather guys...

>>29098400
Cold and overcast. Just how I like it.

*leaning up against you

>>29089305

>Fluttershy lingers at every single enclosure along the way as the two of you wind deeper into the zoo's grounds
>Every time she sees a new animal -- especially if it's something small and/or furry -- she immediately squees, and drags you over to it
>By the time you've been there for a little over an hour, you're exhausted, your legs are aching, and your chest is heaving
>But Fluttershy seems to have energy to spare, at least when it comes to admiring animals
>When she pulls you over to the hyena enclosure, you notice that sky has gone gray again
>Just like the last time you were here, rainclouds are hanging above you in a watery iron haze
>Again?
>Poor Fluttershy will be so disappointed if the visit gets cut short
>Fluttershy herself, of course, has taken no notice of the weather
>She's too focused on the animals to look up at the storm rolling in overhead
>"Aww! They've g-got a little cub! Look at him!"
>At the far end of the enclosure, a mother -- or father, maybe, they all look the same -- hyena prowls out from beneath a rock, with a tiny ball of fuzz scurrying around in her wake
>Fluttershy almost faints
>"L-look at him. Oh..."
>She leans across the rail, trying to get a closer look
>You wrap an arm around her waist, making sure she doesn't fall in
>The last thing the world needs is Harambe 2.0, especially not if it'll enable people to make shitty Lion King references
>"Aren't they s-such cool animals, Anon?"
"They are. Could you, uh, maybe be a bit more careful?"
>"W-why?"
"No reason."
>Fluttershy turns around, facing you
>"Are y-you alright? You look really worried."
"I'm fine. Just, uh..."
>You cast your eyes up at the sky
"It looks like it's going to rain again."

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>>29098575
>another storm

>>29098575
>"So?"
>Fluttershy cocks her head
"I didn't want you to feel disappointed. If we have to leave, or something."
>Now that you say the words aloud, you realize how paranoid you must sound
>Fluttershy wraps her arms around your back
>"If it r-rains, they don't c-close. I d-don't mind staying here. If t-that's okay with you, that is."
"Alright."
>She touches her fingertips to your cheek, trailing smooth little lines down to your jaw
>"Anon? W-what's really wrong?"
"It just brings back some bad memories. Sorry."
>You pull Fluttershy closer to you, holding her against yourself
"Just stick close to me, alright?"
>"Anon, my d-dad's with the p-police. He's n-not going to come back. W-we're safe."
"I know."
>You shrug
"But I guess I'm not used to not needing to worry yet. Sorry."
>Fluttershy just stares at you for a moment
>Then she laughs and rests her head on your shoulder
>"C-c'mon. Let's go to the aviary. It's indoors, so if it d-does start to rain, we'll be able to k-keep dry. Okay?"
"Alright."
>Fluttershy pulls you by the hand -- slower, this time -- up the path, to the arching marble structure of Canterlot Zoo's aviary

>Inside, the place is nearly empty, but not silent
>High marble walls rise in arching columns and vaulted ceilings, all of them bathed in red-orange light from gas lamps hanging on cables
>Birds chirp and sing from various cages, all of them fluttering and squawking from perch to perch, filling the air with lilting titter-song
>Fluttershy pauses, entranced by the music
>"I f-forgot how cool this place was..."
"Yeah, whoa..."

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>>29098682
Man, this reminds me that I haven't been to the zoo in forever

>>29098717
Wanna go to the zoo with me, Anon?

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>>29098726
Sure.

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>>29098717
If you're ever in the glorious city of Rolla, MO, you can feel free to visit our zoo with me, Anon.

We don't actually have a zoo. It's just two dogs and a half-dead cat in some junkie's backyard.

>>29098682
>For the first time since you got here, you find yourself as entranced as Fluttershy
>The birdsong reverberates from hall to hall, forming a sort of atonal, hypnotic chorus
>Fluttershy leads you towards the back of the building, where a small enclosure of doves rests
>She leans against the railing, watching them
>Unlike earlier, she doesn't squee or anything
>She just watches, the reddish light of the halls reflecting in her eyes
>Inside, the birds cluck and coo, fluttering in little white bursts across the enclosure
>Fluttershy sucks in her breath when she notices a mother with her clutch of chicks
>At the tip of the nest, one of the tiny, scrawny things is poised above a drop to the ground
>It beats its tiny wings weakly, unable to lift off
>The mother flutters her own wings behind it, as if to show her child how it's done
>The chick tries again, and the mother nudges it towards the edge of the nest
>Its mother flaps once more, and then the little bird jumps
>For a split second, it plummets, and Fluttershy squeezes her eyes shut
>But before it can hit the ground, the little guy's wings snap open, flapping madly and allowing it to soar awkwardly -- but safely -- onto a branch
>The baby lets out a tiny squeak, which you imagine sounds incredibly triumphant

>>29089305
children confirmed

>>29099070
>ywn watch 'Trials of life' with her
>"Ooh, don't those beaches in Argentina look so scenic! And look, baby seals!"
>"..W-what's that Orca doing so close to sho-, YAMERROOOOOO~~~"

>>29099070
adorable

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>>29099070
Hey Mango, just wanted to thank you for writing this story. It's helped prevent me from going down into a massive fucking depressive spiral lately believe it or not.

Writefags don't get anywhere near the amount of love they deserve so hey, just thought I would let you know.

<3

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>>29070119
Hate to ask, but is this one good? If so what's it about?

>>29100113
Reverse-trap fluttershy
Is good, jefe here is getting ready to wrap it up.

>>29100113
Read it

>>29099638
Jeff deserve a good B'jer

and I'd be happy to provide

>>29067382
What if Shining Armour was really a girl?

Or Big Mac?

bumper.

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>>29100984
I'd be ok with it

>>29100984
Interdating

>>29100984
>Or Big Mac?
>Amazon reverse trap
Can it happen?

>>29100113
It gets pretty intense, but its good, keep reading

Hey, /revtrap/,

I'm writing a green text and I'd like to post it here, but I was having some doubts about whether it was appropriate for the thread. The story does have reverse trap shenanigans going on, but I'm still not entirely sure how much or how quickly I'll get to it. So I guess I'm just wondering if yall would still be interested in a green text if reverse trapping wasn't the only aspect of it.

Thanks!

>>29104413
Yes.
Post it.
NOW!

>>29104452
Okay, But I legit haven't gotten around to the actual Rev trap section yet, so don't be mad!

Writing by moonlight (reverse trap)

***

>Whats the worst way to live?
>Some people say that to live a life without meaning is worse than death.
>others would argue that a boring life wouldn't be worth living either.
>And then there are people who actually suffer physical and emotional harm day in and day out.
>Ironically, those are the people who rarely make melodramatic claims such as wanting to die.
>"Oh what a crow at my door, black like my heart..."
>You're jostled back to consciousness by one of the new freshmen trying to present her first short story.
>The writing club has been something of your baby since sophomore year. A whiny, moody baby, but yours all the same.
>You managed to revive the club into a booming 4 consistent members and 14 names who visit twice a semester to get their papers edited.
>Okay so maybe it's not the dead poet's society you were hoping for, but you need the extra curricular to satisfy your college adviser's constant harping.
>Still, even listening through this Deviant Art tier piece was nicer than sitting at home jerking it to girly cartoon bisons.
>That being said, between all the "shadow"s and "darkness"es you begin to worry that this might become some disgusting fanfic.
>"Thank you, Luna" you cough as she completes her reading "Sharing is normally the most difficult part, and now we can get to editing".
>"You didn't think it was good?" she asks looking down.
>"I think it was a good start, but I want to wait until I have more than a page to base my reaction on" you reply cautiously.
>"Oh... of course, I probably should have written more... It's just my homework... and..." she trails off looking ashamed.
>Quickly you realize that you may have been too harsh given the now crestfallen girl in front of you.

>>29104577

>*ahem* "Luna, could you help me carry some of the laptops over from the computer lab?" you ask hoping to get her alone for a moment.
>She looks up at you with a shaky smile "sure, anon".
>Freshmen are always so damn delicate.
>You and Luna turn out of the room and into the third floor hallway.
>The hall is lit in an orange white glow from the afternoon sun seeping in through the windows.
>Luna was a short slender girl who, if only by appearance, possessed almost no visual cues that would indicate her to be anything other than a skeleton in a hoodie.
>Her narrow frame made her clothes more like drapes, showing no sign of hips or breasts to speak of.
>Maybe you would stop off at the vending machine and grab her a snack. She obviously hadn't eaten given that her hands were shaking.
>Or maybe that's because of what you said.
>Shit
>You quickly try to break the tension.
>"I want you to know that no one thinks that you're a bad writer" you say turning your head towards her.
>"If you have classwork or other obligations that stop you from writing, then that's okay. We certainly won't turn you away for not meeting a quota.".
>Luna's mouth turned to show a trace of a smile.
>Certainly it wouldn't hurt anything to go a bit farther...
>"and" you mumble "I'd love to read over your story once you finish it, I'll even help you edit it if you want".
>For the first time Luna looks up at you.
>Her eyes were huge with deep sleepless circles resting under her eyes.
>You felt paralyzed by them; their deep violet seemed strange and unnatural. It felt as if she could look straight through you.
>"Thank you... but I don't think I'm going to come back. Actually, I think I need to go." She chokes out as she turns and sprints down the hallway.
>Dumbfounded, you're about to call out an apology, but you realize it probably wouldn't fix anything.
>You lumber back towards the club room to find your three other idiots waiting in anticipation for your return.

>>29104584

>"You fucked up, senpai" laughs a short athletic girl reclining on the top row of chairs.
>Dash, a real devotee of the club, was being forced to be here by her english professor after failing Eng1 two years in a row.
>From beside the door a tall willowy girl mumbles "My fliers and recruitment tactics aren't going to do anything if we cant manage to retain them once they get here" she glances down at the nearly empty attendance sheet.
>"Twi, I'm very grateful for the help, but sometimes freshmen writers just don't stay. Yeah, this one may have been my fault, but it's not like there wont be others." you say defensively.
>Without a moment wasted, a pop of confetti cascades across the side of your head followed by a rather loud chant you recognize to be Pinkie.
>"And what about MY new writer's party!? Mom says I'm not allowed to come home with extra cake anymore. She won't stop going on and on about blah, blah, diabetes, blah, blah, heart arrhythmia!"
>She continues, but the ringing in your ear seems to help in your efforts to tune her out.
>"ALRIGHT!" you shout "It's not like we can get her back now, there's nothing else I can do."
>Silence falls for a moment after your outburst.
>"Well you could talk to her when you return her backpack." says twilight grinning and pointing to a ratty little backpack sitting next to the podium.
>You hold your breath as you turn to inspect the backpack hoping in vain that it might be someone else's.
>Lifting it reveals a silver moon iron-on patch under which reads the name "Luna" scrawled in, what looks like, someone's attempt at calligraphy with a jumbo Sharpy.
>"Enjoy your date, Anon" snickers Dash.

***

>>29104591
>After the club draws to a close you decide to stay a while in hopes that Luna might return.
>"This is fine" you grumble to yourself
>"Luna will realize she forgot her backpack, and have to come back once she thinks that the room is empty"
>You quickly pull out your laptop and try not to dwell on the mediocrity of your plan.
>"hmm... term paper... or World of Horsecraft?"
>Before you can decide a message pops up from a guild mate, and irl friend of yours.
Sunset Shimmer: "Anon! This stupid fucking druid class is broken! I can't change back into my unicorn form! QQ"
Anon:"Feels bad man, good luck leveling without magic."
Sunset: "Fuck. That. I have to get off anyway, are you coming to the play tonight?"
Anon: "Shit, is that tonight? Yeah, I'm already at school so I'll meet you there."
Sunset: "Anon, I'm TRYING to get you an in with the theater girls, but CLEARLY you don't want it bad enough"
Anon:"Oh fight me, bacon head."
Sunset: "Haha, you're gonna regret that when I let it *slip* that you're gay."
Anon: "We had a deal, 10k bits in game, and you tell them that I'm hung like a horse."
Sunset: "And, I can still make good on that while still claiming that you're into dudes... or maybe bisons?"
Anon:"...that was one ti-"
>You stop yourself.
Anon:"Fine, I'm sorry, what do you want?"
Sunset:"We can just call it a blank IOU, maybe I'll need some head someday, maybe I'll need you to pass on that bitching Rapidash mount next time it drops ;)"
Anon:"I'm not sure which horrifies me more, losing that mount, or tasting your bacon pubes. Goodbye."
>With that you shut your laptop and begin collecting your things.
>As you begin to walk out of the room you stop yourself and crane your gaze back to the, still unclaimed, backpack resting on the carpeted floor.
>A wave of newfound curiosity sweeps over you as you think of what to do with it.
>The lost and found was always an option, but the need to investigate other people was always one of your major problems.

>>29104598
>People were too damn interesting to resist. Understanding other people was your guilty pleasure, and it had gotten you into trouble on more than one occasion. Whenever they let their guards down, or let you get just a little too much information, you would spend weeks thinking about how that person worked and how to make them see you as indispensable.
>A year earlier you had found such a person in your Calc II course. Rarity, a purple haired girl who just wanted to shine a little brighter for the love of everyone around her.
>She loved etiquette and fashion, but not snobbishly or selfishly. Rarity genuinely wanted to make the world more beautiful for everyone, and that's what caught your attention.
>>"Darling, you seem to have a hole in your sweater. It would make me ever so happy to fix it for you."
>>"I simply must focus on my friend's shawl for this evening. Her wardrobe just doesn't do her justice, and I have taken it upon myself to ensure her a good experience at homecoming."
>>"Would you like to join me for lunch, Anon? A friend of mine managed to only pack a muffin for lunch and, seeing as I couldn't just allow her to go hungry, I elected to sneak us out for an excursion to that wonderful little Thai place just down the street."
>5 months later and you had done your best to learn everything in the world about her. Her hopes, and her aspirations were all so close to being understood. It was almost time for you to finish your work.
>The day that it happened was still like a dream to you.

~~~one year ago~~~

>Rarity quietly sits down in her seat without greeting you or anyone else.
>She gently plays with a section of her hair, and, you figured that she must have been at it for a while because the section was frayed away from its normal uniform luster.
>"Rara, you doing okay?" you ask.
>She looks up at you only briefly before returning her eyes to the table below.

>>29104577
Always happy to see more Lulu.

>>29104602
>"Not particularly, Anon. I'm in something of an awkward position..." she trails off wincing at her own words.
>Proceeding cautiously you whisper "You know you can talk to me if you need help, right?".
>A weak smile surfaces as her lightly sparkling eyes flutter towards you again.
>"Spike asked me out" escaped her lips in a strained squeak.
>Judging by the tears shining in the corners of her eyes, you put together that this wasn't good news.
>"I don't know what to do, Anon. I told him I needed a day, but I cant bear the thought of hurting him." her sniffles, though hushed, are now present on every breath.
>"I jus- I don't know how to fix this without making things..." she pauses a moment and stares at her hands.
>"without me making things ugly..." she breaths shakily.
>"Rara-" you start but are cutoff by the annoyed cough of your calculus teacher, Ms. Cheerilee.
>Class was starting and you recline yourself back into your seat.
>You jot down a quick message onto a scrap of paper and slip it beneath Rarity's downturned eyes.
> ["meet me in the library"]
>You get up and quickly walk to the door, signing out to use the rest room.

~twelve minutes later~

>Just as you began to fear that your friend wasn't coming, a pale face appears through the bookshelves.
>Rarity's blue eyes met yours.
>"Anon, what is this about?" she quietly asked
>In a hushed voice, you whisper "Come over here, I want you to see something"
>Rarity looks incredulous, but relents and walks around to meet you.
>"Look here" you say as you hold up the year book for her to see,
>"Look at the dresses for homecoming last year, and the decorations. Look at the school banner, the uniforms, even the damn draconequus costume for the Halloween party."
>"What about them?" she huffs, clearly already knowing what you're getting at.
>"You made all of them, and more, every page here is dotted with your work making this school more beautiful." you gently reply.

>>29104603
I feel the same way. Neet Luna is still one of my all time favorites.

>>29104612

>"As long as I've known you everything you have done has been meaningful, and difficult and bea-"
>"And now you get to see me do it again!" she deftly cries to the ground, her fists clenched and body rigid.
>"What?" you dumbly reply.
>"I'm going to make him happy, he's been my friend for a long time and he deserves to be happy. I couldn't stand to see him destroyed like that! He deserves a beautiful girl to love him, but, if it's me that he wants, then so be it." she chokes out, sobbing now.
>Stunned, and without thinking you throw your arms around her and press her shaking head into your chest.
>She limply pushes away for a moment, but seems to give up as you both sink to the floor.
>You hold her for, what feels like forever, as she soaks your sweater with her tears.
>After a while she calms and just lays in your arms, clinging to you and sniffling.
>"Do you remember when you came over to my house and forced me to watch that Victoria Secret fashion show?" you whisper.
>"...y-yes?"
>You continue "You enticed me with the promise of half naked women trotting down a runway, but by halfway through I was completely desensitized to it, and bored to tears."
>"You were just mad that you couldn't take your pants off to enjoy it..." she grumbles into your, now sodden, torso.
>"heh, what can I say? I'm polite. Anyway, do you remember when that salmon colored one piece came on stage?"
>Suddenly, as if an old hatred had awoken, rarity vehemently responds "Oh god, that thing with the plastic gemstones and those awful tassels! That thing still gives me nightmares."
>"That's the day I learned that you didn't just like shiny things, you also need them to be authentic" you hint
>"Well of course, darling. Costume jewelry is the most unrefined accessory one can adorn themselves with. You cant have something be beautiful if it isn't rea-" she stops herself
>"..."
>"Rarie?"

>>29104621

>>29104621

>Her face silently sinks back into your chest, and, with no sobs at all, you feel fresh tears now breach your undershirt and onto your skin.
>"...You make the world more beautiful just by being in it, Rarity. That's why Spike likes you, hell that's why everyone likes you. Everything you do is to make something authentic and lovely for everyone to have in their lives; you pour your heart and your soul into manifesting beauty where it has no right to be, yet, like magic, you make it appear anyway." you begin
>"..."
>"It has never mattered how benign or how impossible the undertaking is because you treat them all as if they were the most important thing in the world. You make it happen for everyone around you, and only ever get around to yourself when everyone else is polished and perfect first. You're not just a cherry blossom fluttering in the air, you're the tree itself constantly sending out storms of cascading petals across the world around you... and now you would sacrifice your branches just to keep someone warm through the night."
>"..."
>"Rarie, you can spend your whole life making the world a better, more marvelous place for everyone, but don't become a martyr to make it happen. Please, for the sake of everyone who loves you and wants you to be happy, please don't step onto that pyre"
>"..."
>"..."
>"Ra-" you're silenced by a soft kiss meeting your lips.

This is it for now, Here's the pastebin if you'd like it.
https://pastebin.com/2uzezzLV


>>29104634

>If a moment in heaven costs an eternity in hell, the sound of Cheerilee's not so cheery voice was certainly scalding enough to began the second half of the metaphor.
>"I don't even want to hear your excuse" she growls

~~~return~~~

>It took her all of 5 minutes to write you both up for skipping class to make out, getting detention for a week, and starting a chain of rumors that would spread through the whole school and, sadly, reach Spike.
>Rarity was crushed and you two hadn't really talked since all of that went down.
>Suddenly the thought of trying to "figure out" Luna didn't really matter to you anymore; you decide to take the damn backpack to the lost and found and just go home.

live

>>29105515

rise chickun

>>29107361
A R I S E C H I K U N A R I S E

What were the bump limits on /mlp/ again?

Are there any good r63 Derpy stories?

>>29108343
Hi strange

>>29108343
No, derpy is a shit pony

>>29108317
500

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>>29099638
I'm really glad this story has meant so much to you, Anon.

>>29099070
>The mother joins her young on the branch, again helping it to jump
>It flies mildly better this time, fluttering in an awkward circle around its perch
>Fluttershy, unlike she did with the other animals, doesn't make a sound
>She watches, transfixed, as the little bird finally gets up the courage to fly back to its nest, joining its squawking siblings
>The mother lands next to it, nuzzling her face against her child's head
>Fluttershy leans against you, her breath coming in slow, gentle waves
>"Y-you know..."
"Hm?"
>"That l-little guy... he's k-k-kinda like me..."
"How so? Small and adorable?"
>The compliment comes easily, and it makes Fluttershy's face go beet-red
>"N-no! I m-m-mean, m-maybe that too... if t-that's what you t-think... b-but..."
>She sputters for a moment, wringing her hands as she tries to remember what she was trying to say
>"I m-mean, he's like me b-because..."
>She bites her lip
>"B-because sometimes, you need to h-have good people around you t-to... t-to teach you how to use your w-wings. To h-help you fly."

>>29109665
>>"That l-little guy... he's k-k-kinda like me..."
>"How so? Small and adorable?"
kek'd

>>29109665
Randomly clicked on this thread and read your pastebin, and the story is really good. The whole Dash wanting Anon to date Butters thing reminded me of when Anon said Dash probably felt bad that she couldn't protect Anon and Butters

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>>29109665

bimp

>>29109665
>inb4 this ends with a dramatic kissing scene and a "they lived happily ever after"

>>29109665
Love this story. Glad the thread didn't 404 while I was gone.

>>29099070
I was in a city once where the zoo just had one small dog. It was a Shih tzu

>>29111709
pug yourself

pmub

Not 10 again

>>29114280
9 ain't fine

So, aside from the links in OP, are there other reverse trap stories you guys would recommend?

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Bump with a content. I'm trying to get better.


>So... its been an unusual day for you.
>You don't usually go on Craigslist,
>You don't usually find yourself setting up an amateur escort,
>And you don't usually leave at 3 am to meet random Internet people at a run down McDonalds.
>yet one after another, these were more or less the steps that brought you here.
>The girl seemed nice, and, although you didn't get any pictures, 200 dollars for 3 hours seemed good enough to be worth the risk.
>But, as you walk into the "restaurant", the risks actually start to dawn on you.
>This could be a catfish
>She could have an std
>She could be...
"...not here?"
>you mumble to yourself.
>The McDonalds was all but empty aside from a cashier who looked, and smelled, like he was stoned out of his mind.
>You scan the room again and notice the top of a beanie sticking out from one of the booths.
>Jesus, how short was this girl?
>As you walk up, your mind goes to work on how the mechanics of this Frick frack are actually gonna work.
"I've got the two hu-"
>As she, err he comes into view, you realize that this probably isn't who you're looking for.
>He was just a kid, maybe 13 or 14, with short blue/ black hair jutting out from his beanie
>Chris Henson flashes in your mind as you sputter out an apology.
"Sorry! Thought you were someone else!"
>The kid looked up from the his tray, which was covered in four or five cheese burger wrappers.
>His eyes seemed gentle and sad. A thin trace of redness filed them.
>This kid looked exhausted.
>"So you're gonna drag me out here, and jump ship the moment you see me?" he asks, eyes turning down in anger.
>If his appearance hadn't given away his age, his soft feminine voice certainly would have.
>"Please--" he sighs trying to hide his frustration "Please just give me a chance."
>His voice was full of shame.
"Listen, I just don't want to go to jail..."

>>29115770

cont.

>"Then why did you even come out here!?" he shouts.
"I didn't think I was going to star in an episode of To Catch a Predator! And, I'm not even into dudes, let alone little boys! "
>The anger suddenly drains from his face leaving only a dumbfounded expression.
>"Wait, so you think..."
>He trails off putting the pieces together.
"You didn't do a good job of hiding it..."
>"Anon..." he looks like he's about to cry
>"I'm a girl."
"..."
>"a-and I'm 18... you can check my ID if you want..." he, she, they mumble morbidly.
>She pulls out an expired ID from when she was 14, but the math seemed to work out.
"I... I'm sorry..."
>desperately she interrupts you,
>"You can put a bag on my head if you need to. Just please don't go, I just really need the money"
"No I meant I'm sorry for thinking that you were a boy. You seemed really hurt, and I didn't mean to do that."
>You say as you sit down.
>"oh... thank you" she mumbles
>"So, you're not leaving then?" she asks with a hint of hope.
"And I'm not gonna put a bag on your head either."
>She looks mortified at, what were, her own words
"listen, what's your name?"
>"Luna."
"Well Luna, do you wanna get out of here?"


yay/neigh so far?

>>29115775
yee

>>29115775
moar

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>>29115775
>4 hours ago

NIGGA YOU BEST NOT BE DONE
DOWNTRODDEN LULU NEEDS YOUR HELP

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>>29116177
>>29117037
>>29117250

Sorry! My family keeps pulling me away to cook and wrap presents.

>>29115775
cont

>Maybe it was guilt for insulting her, or maybe it was pity for how desperate she was, but regardless you had still let this strange girl climb into your car.
>Luna's shame had been apparent since the beginning, but was much more present in the silence of the ride.
>"My place isn't exactly the nicest, but I'd feel a lot safer hosting... if that's alright for you." she explains cautiously
"Yeah, it's no problem at all"
>You're suddenly struck with how unsure she is.
>Surely, you think, she's done this kind of thing before... right?
"So what do you need the money for?"
>You ask without taking your eyes from the road.
>"I didn't make rent last month..." she trails off.
>"My landlord told me I had till the end of the week to get 300 dollars together." her eyes twitch in annoyance.
"Wait, shit, I thought we agreed on 200."
> Panic slips through your voice.
>Immediately Luna stops you. "no no! We agreed on 200, you're fine. I have enough to make up the difference"
"Why didn't you just charge 300? 100 bucks an hour is still the cheapest pussy in town."
>She recoils, and turns her eyes downward
"..."
>Your own stupidity was staggering
>Luna pulls her knees into her chest and tries to smother her shaking.
>You pull the car over
"Luna."
>You turn to face her.
"I'm really sorry I said that..."
>She doesn't reply.
"I just meant to say that... that you're worth a lot more than what you're selling yourself for."
>She sniffles loudly, as small sobs escape her.
"Here."
>You take out your wallet and, by some miracle, you find 120 dollars in cash alongside the envelope you had prepared earlier.
"Whatever ends up happening tonight, just take this."
>You press the money into her hands.

>>29117759
cont

"That's 320... it's still not enough, but maybe we could go get something to eat and talk this over."
>Luna pulls her hands in and inspects the cash and the envelope.
>Her shaking stops, and then starts again significantly stronger this time.
>"W-why are you d-doing this?" she chokes out.
>"D-do you w-want me to..." her shaking hand reaches towards your pants.
>She turns her head away as she's about to grab your crotch.
"Be happy."
>You take her hand in yours and hold it still.
"That's all I want."
>She flinches, but turns back to you with tears rolling down her cheeks.
>"I'm sorry, Anon. You d-don't have to be so kind to me if y-you feel guilty..." she trails off
>Slowly she begins to put down the money.
>Just as she is about to let go, you stop her.
"Luna,"
>You look at her sternly.
"Lets go pay your rent."
>You press her hand, money and all, back into her tiny chest.
>Her soft sobbing continues as she goes back to hiding her face in her knees.


I'll try to have more up soon

>>29112840

>>29114930

This is a pretty niche thread, but all these stories have been some of the best I've read. I just wish they were longer.

>>29067382
Oh shit, I forgot about this after butter's dad ended up getting caught. Has any more shit gone down or has it just been SOL from here on out?

So /Revtrap/ who is:

>Best pony to trap

>Most underwritten pony you want to see as a trap

>Worst pony to trap

Also post some ideas for stories! It might grab us some new writers.

>>29120660
Worst would be muffins

Best is flurry heart

Live!

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>>29117764
cont

>Your savior complex was suddenly in full force as you drive to Luna's apartment.
>A few hundred dollars was a lot of money to just throw away, but the idea of rescuing this poor girl made you not care at all.
"So what do you normally do, Luna?"
>She looks confused at the question.
>"What do you mean, Anon?" she asks
"like your job, how did you pay for rent before last month?"
>"Oh, well... my sister had been sending me some money since I left my parent's house..."
>She was clearly uncomfortable with the subject.
>"Cel probably just got tired of wasting money on me"
"Cel, that's your sister?"
>"Yup, it's short for Celestia."
"So how long have you been on your own then?"
>"About 3 years now"
"You've been alone since you were 15?"
>Your shock must be apparent.
>Luna shrugs glumly,
>"It's not a big deal, my family never really cared if I was around anyway..."
"What do you mean?"
>"My parents love Cel, she out shown me in every way and still does. Even when I lived with them, I could never be the daughter they wanted."
"So you ran away?"
>She looks longingly out of the window for a moment
>"No. not exactly... I was kicked out because my parents hate lesbians."
>A wave of sadness overtakes you.
"Oh, you're gay? I ... I didn't realize that you wer-"

>>29123609


>"No." Luna cuts you off with a snap.
>She let's out a deep breath
>"I'm sorry..."
>"I'm not gay, but I took the fall for Cel when our parents found her porn."
>"They weren't even surprised when I "came out". They kicked me out and cut off all ties to me."
"Jesus..."
>"Yeah, fuck that guy."
"Celestia didn't stop them?"
>Luna looks down to her hands.
>"She couldn't, she was in her first year of college and needed our parent's money to graduate."
>A hint of anger stains her words.
>"She was never going to give up her status for me... and now she's just forgotten about me completely."
"Luna..."
>"I really don't want to talk about it, Anon."
"Well that's alright because the gps says that we're here"
>Luna looks up suddenly as you pull over next to a sketchy looking bar
>"oh, right, sorry..."
"This is where you live?"
>The bar looked more like a crack house aside from the dimly lit neon sign sitting in the window.
>As you step out of the car, you get a better look and read the sign aloud.
"The Blue Moon?"

______

Here's the pastebin. I'm not sure how much I'll be able to do tomorrow since hearth's warming .

https://pastebin.com/yAfASHZ6

>>29123609
>dat pic
"Girl, get your black ass over here so I can kiss you!"

>>29123660

hehe... Ce-lez-tia

Merry Christmas everyone!

>>29068100
this

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>Page 10

>>29067382

>>29124360
this

>>29123660
pls try

>>29109665
So qt, i can't handle this

save

begone page 10

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Page 8 ain't great

merry Christmas, jefe
come back pls

>>29130797
bump for jefe

>>29130267

>>29131339
BUMB

page 10 go away

Well, holiday festivities are over. Back to the usual stuff.

Will have some content out within the next hour.

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>>29109665
>Fluttershy takes a shaky, nervous little breath
>"And t-that's what D-Dash, M-Ms. Harshwhinny, officer G-Gilda, and you, most of all, h-have done for me. And I c-can't find a good way to say it, b-but..."
>Fluttershy glances at the door, as if worried someone's watching you
>No one is, of course; the two of you are completely alone
>When she realizes no one is, Fluttershy throws her arms around your waist, pulling her body against yours
>Her mouth moves up towards your lips, but she hesitates, just a few inches away
>"It it, um... it's it o-okay if I do this?"
>You can feel the nervous whispering of her breath
"Yeah, yeah... it's okay..."
>You wrap your arms around her back, hugging her against your chest
>Fluttershy seizes up for a moment...
>And then she presses her mouth against yours in a scared, quivering kiss

>The kiss doesn't last long, of course
>You can feel her mouth trembling against yours the entire time, and she breaks away quickly, breathless
>"I, uh... s-sorry... I just c-couldn't... I couldn't t-think of another way to say..."
>This time, you're the one initiating the kiss
>She seems less scared during the second one, seeming to meld into your arms in a long, sacred embrace before the two of you break apart again
>When you do, you're as breathless as she is
>"...t-thank you."

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>>29133754
hhhhnnngggg

>>29133754
Butters a cute

>>29133754
FINALLY, YES

>>29133754
Muh feels

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>>29133754

>The two of you leave the birdhouse arm-in-arm
>Fluttershy looks so happy she could be glowing, walking with skippy, excited little steps
>She's humming something under her breath, and rests her head on your shoulder
>Unfortunately, almost the moment you step outside, you feel the first raindrops plopping down onto your forehead
>Above you, the clowds have coalesced into a pale-gray sheet, and thunder rumbles in the distance
"Dammit. Sorry, Butters."
>"What? S-sorry? Why?"
"I dunno. I was hoping we could walk around a bit more. I guess we should head back. Or find somewhere to wait the storm out."
>"I don't m-mind getting a l-little wet."
"You... oh."
>You're not sure if the double-entendre was intentional or not
>Fluttershy was already blushing so hard that it's hard to tell
>Either way, you can feel your heartrate skyrocket

>Fluttershy leads on a slow, winding path through the rest of the zoo as the rain slowly begins to cascade around you
>It's starts soft, but grows gradually heavier, coming down around your and her shoulders in thick, bright waves
>By the time you reach your car, both of you are completely soaked
>Fluttershy's sweater barely still hangs on her skinny form, and her hair is a damp mess
>But she's beaming more brightly than you've ever seen
>Just before you can let her into the car, she stops you
>"Do you t-think, um..."
"Hm?"
>"Maybe, could w-we, uh..."
>She takes ahold of your hand, pursing her lips
>"T-try that kiss thing again? B-before we head back?"
>You take her in your arms, and press your mouth against hers
>And as the rain falls down around the two of you, you finally feel the doubt and the fear of the last two weeks washing away
>No matter what happens from here, you're more certain than ever that things will be okay

>>29134709
GOOD GOD DAMN ...my heart. I'm trying not to scream gleefully in front of
my family.

>>29134709
Jeff, how whats your process for writing?

Do you just go straight to your post or do you have an editing process first?

>>29100113
>He wants to know if reverse fluttertrap is good

Jesus christ.
Yes.
I don't know how much to spoil beyond the title, or that isn't revealed in the first 200 or so lines.
There's some intense conflict, but the story is mostly comfy.
Ending (is shaping up to be): not a downer one.

>>29068100

>>29133754
I am a speed reader, but does Butters still have boy clothes at this point?
I need to know for reasons

>>29136523
I think she only wears boy clothes at the school

>>29134709
This FINALLY happened, i can't handle these feels

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>>29134709
yiss

>>29134910
we can only hope in our lord and savior, jeff.

I'm really hoping that we get a poly triad thingy , its so annoying to find that with good writing.

page 10 save

>>29138822
check'd

page 9 again =(

Jeff where you at

>>29138945

>>29140423

>>29137924
Sometimes I wonder if I'm poly-curious or something given how often I find myself rooting for it in fiction.

Full-blown harem endings are so unrealistic they get cringey; but a triad ending makes sense here, especially given how much each person cares about and feels for each other person. Even though I feel like a bittersweet "Anon gets with Butters, but RD moves on," might be more likely.

>>29141755
Butters will get with Dash and cuck Anon

>>29141664

>>29142402

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>>29143891
[LOUD WAITING NOISES]

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>>29141955
mfw

>>29143957
(You)

>>29144257
Are a fag

>>29142977

>>29144257
The dotted underlines just don't have the same rush as a red (you).

8 not great

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9 not fine

>>29147548
I want more cop Gilda in my life.
Do you think Gilda would mellow out once she is a mother?

Yo this is my shit

>>29147567
No, she's only mellow during your refractory period, and barely then.

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Sorry about the absence. Been a bit bogged down with personal-life stuff. Super short update for now, will try to have some more out late tonight.

>>29134709

>Back at your house, you find your parents still haven't arrived back from wherever they currently are
>Which is pretty convenient, seeing as that means you and Fluttershy get the place to yourself
>...though you kinda hope they're not dead, or that they haven't abandoned you
>Still sopping wet, the two of you plod inside
>"Are you, um... ok-kay if I use your s-shower?"
"Yeah, go ahead. You can borrow some of my clothes, if you want."
>Fluttershy nods, nuzzling her cheek against your shoulder
>"T-thanks."
>You head to your room and grab her some old sweat pants and a baggy, stretched Smash Mouth t-shirt
>The water starts up in your shower, and you lay the clothes just outside the bathroom door for her
>Meanwhile, you start to change into some dry stuff of your own, using a spare towel to sponge the rainwater from your hair and shoulder
>"Um, A-Anon?"
>Fluttershy's voice reaches your ears, barely audible over the shower spray
"Yeah? Something wrong?"
>"N-no, but... I m-mean... not r-really, but... uh... c-could you come in here, f-for a second?"

>>29147709
>old smashmouth t-shirt
y-you gonna let her wear your old jnco's too?

cuz das qt, bruh

>>29147709
Ooh dey gon frick

>>29147709
>>29148383
Record it for Rainbow.

>>29146587
I heard people saying gookmoot removed the (You), but it hasn't changed for me.
Explain pls

>>29148576
Same

>>29147709
Oh my

Just finished Fatal Flaw

God damnit

>>29148996
I just want to hug that Dashie.

>>29149106
She had...a hard life.
But seriously, what a great story. Excellently written.

I skipped the >Rape part

>>29149184
I didn't. I personally think it added more emotion for Dash.

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>>29147709

Go on...

>>29147567
Have you read Jeff other story with her? It's pretty good. Not as good as this though.

>>29133764
Sauce on pic?

>>29151790
Here friend
http://rule34-beta.paheal.net/post/1849303

>>29068100

>>29152726
Perfect sized tits that fit in the palm of each hand.

>Dash gets cucked

>>29154209

>Implying she doesn't like it

>>29123660
Hey man, I like it

>>29123660
Seconding >>29154672, would love to read more!

SAVING BUMP HURAH

Last bump before I'm off to bed. Gnight

>I've been working on a story of my own but I'm not sure anyone wants to see it, because it's not that great

One day, maybe?

>>29156688
Just do it mate. How bout a bet? If you make yours, then ill post mine

>>29157950

>>29147709
Hi, Jeff.

Nice to see you.

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>>29147709
oh my god

>>29157418
I'm still writing it. I'm serious, I think it's only for me. If I go anywhere with it, I might post it

Bumpola

>>29158542

>>29147709
oh sheeiiiiit

bup

Fuck I love reverse traps, especially when they pretend to be boys. Not just tomboys, but have themselves hidden.

I'm sure we all share this feel

>>29069472
Jeff!

Is it possible to divide your pastebin story in parts? Im crashing everytime i start reading on my shitty phone

Does anyone have any good reverse trap pics?

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>>29162594
Found this

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>>29162605
And this

Writing one right now lads. So exciting!

What ever happened to that Vinyl story that one guy was doing? Ded?

Welp, off to bed. Gnight lads. Have a bump.

>>29163442
The one with hottie Treehugger?

Yeah he long gone, so sad. I cry everytime.

Anyone got it though? I would like to save that as a future prompt.

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>>29163880
I gotchu senpai
http://pastebin.com/MFDwaBgm

live

I'm constantly assailed by writers block.

For fuck sake, I really wanna write this story but have no idea for a plot

>>29161153
Yes. That is why we are here.

>>29166135
Try drinking a little.
Always gets the gears in my mind turning a bit whenever I get the block.
Plus the warm feeling always makes me GLaD.
Just don't drink too much or else you won't be able to see what you'really typing.

>>29163947
Blessing on to you dear Anon.

>>29166545
I'll give that a shot. I always struggle with this sort of stuff. Lately it feels like my writing ability has completely gone away. I used to be able to write well enough for myself, but not anymore.

You know what they say though: Write drunk, edit sober

>>29166649
Well said, the blessing of pastebin.

>>29147709
Fuck me. I had no idea I was into this, and I'm sat here almost vibrating in place like Dashperv.
These three need a happy ending. All of them. Together. Please....

Mango, you are such a shit for wringing my old dried up heart like this.
You are a wonderful writer, please never stop.

>>29120660
I can't really think of one in particular that's best or worst. They're all pretty good in different ways.
I usually prefer humanoid Fluttershy to have big boobs and hips, but a trap is fine too.
I was surprised how well Luna works as a trap.

I love the idea of seeing emotional struggle from Rainbow Dash being forced to reverse trap for some reason; she's so used to just being herself, however that might be, she assumes that because she's so rough and tumble she'll have no trouble at all passing as a guy, but it quickly ends up making her hyper-conscious of the ways in which she is feminine. Struggling against her own embarrassment at desiring to be soft and cuddled and spoiled like a girl is absolute peak Rainbow Unf.

Actually, maybe Celestia is worse rev-trap. It'd feel super weird seeing her pass as a guy, physically or socially.

I'd kind of like to see AJ doing some kind of, I don't know, "forced to pretend to be the man of the farm" thing. She's not flat, so she has to deal with the irritation of breast binding, and everybody ends up thinking,
>"Man that tall, husky dude has muscle but does no one else notice his butt and hips, and how soft his skin is? N- no homo...."

It also super amuses me to have rule 63 version of male characters reverse trapping. Could you imagine an Eris reverse trap?

Maybe I should try my hand at one of these.

>>29123660
I really like this, and really want to see where it goes.
I really love the "gets thrown out by taking the homo-fall for her successful sister" angle.

I feel like the savior complex and just shoving money at her came a little too quickly. He came out to get a hooker, boner should have the wheel right now. There should've at least been some agonizing.
Maybe it's my inexperience hiring escorts, but three hours seems like an unusual amount of time to hire one; did he take some viagra or something?

>>29168519
>I feel like the savior complex and just shoving money at her came a little too quickly. He came out to get a hooker, boner should have the wheel right now. There should've at least been some agonizing. Maybe it's my inexperience hiring escorts, but three hours seems like an unusual amount of time to hire one; did he take some viagra or something?

Yup, I originally meant this to be a very short story, but I overlooked a lot of little details and realistic pacing. Now I'm honestly not sure where to go from from where it is. I might end up rewriting the beginning if I finish it. I just want to be good like Jeff senpai

>>29168519
>; she's so used to just being herself, however that might be, she assumes that because she's so rough and tumble she'll have no trouble at all passing as a guy, but it quickly ends up making her hyper-conscious of the ways in which she is feminine

If it makes you feel better, I'm writing two stories that are just like this

>>29168649
Anything you wanna show us?The

>>29169166
I'm still working on it...it doesn't have much of a plot yet, but tell me what you think of this

It's fairly deep into the story so far, so it's not going to make sense, but I'd like to know your guys' thoughts


“So, what now?”
>”Well,” Twilight pushes her bangs from her face and turns to you. “Why don’t we hang out at the library?”
>Dash groans
>”The library!? Come on, why can’t we hang out at the store, or a skate park or something?”
“You wanna hang out at the skatepark to study?”
>Dash, seeming to forget his predicament, presses on
>”Hell yeah I do, skating is so flippin’ cool!”
>”Do you skate?” Twilight, as deadpan as ever, asks
>For a moment Dash’s face glows red, before he sucks in a deep breath and answers
>”N-No haha” He nervously scratches at his scalp, tussling his already unkempt hair. “I just think it’s cool.”
>Yep, that’s Dash for you. A slave to all things cool.
“Probably can’t afford a skateboard” you mutter beneath your breath
>Dash seems to hear this and winces. He knows it’s true. God knows he had to work his ass off to get his crappy ass car
>You’ve seen it, it’s an old beat up sedan with rust splotches emboldened across the faded paint
>The windshields are cracked
>And it makes this gunshot sound when it starts, causing everybody in the vicinity to duck for cover
>Yep, that’s the Dashmobile.
>”So, library?” Twilight interjects.
>”The school is going to close soon. You don’t mean the….” Dash gulps. “The public library?” She says the words like she’s trapped in some shitty horror movie.
>Clearly not a fan

>>29169216
>”Yeah, but it’s a good walk away,” Twilight answers. “So...we’ll need a car….” She stares down Dash
>Man, for a really generous and smart young girl, she can be blunt
>Dash looks around. “What, you wanna take my car?”
>”I walk to school.” Twilight gives her reason
>She then turns to you. “What about you Anon? Do you have a car we could take?”
>Dash chuckles a bit, clearly remembering your bike and the incident from this morning
>You elbow Dash in the chest, and to your surprise, you feel a tiny bit of skin and fat there
>He keels over almost instantly, the laughter sucked right out of him
“No, sorry, I rode my bike this morning.” You answer
>”I know. I heard.”
>Jesus Christ who keeps telling everyone you got hit by a car. Was it Mr. Armor?
>”Dash, would you mind driving us to the library?”
>Twilight really is a no bullshit kind of person. You admire that, especially when dealing with Dash, who’s got more spunk and personality than his slight frame should allow
>Dash wheels upward at the sound of his name, but he still keeps rubbing his chest where you elbowed him, blood pumping through his cheeks
>He gives you a sour look before turning to Twilight and saying “Yeah, sure”
>Great! You get to see how shitty of a driver Dash is

2/2 of all I'm willing to share so far

>>29120660
Best pony to trap is Vinyl Scratch.
Best pony to reverse trap is Luna.

>>29168632
I'll look forward to more, rewrite or no.
I have no idea what you have planned, but from here they could still have sex, in some kind of fucked up Luna: "I don't take no fucking hand-outs, you're getting what you paid for" and Anon: "I did pay... and she's good looking, and oh god boner is assuming command" situation.

If I were writing a longer story with this conceit I'd move on to Anon feeling maximum over-regret as he gets a peek at the self-esteem issues that combined with desperation to drive her to this. Could lead in to an arc like a kind of prickly slice of life as he tries to reach out to her and she tries to recoil.

>>29168649
Yeesss

>>29169216
>>29169227
Not bad wordsing.
I'd have to see the lead-up to understand the appropriateness of these reactions in context.

This is probably too nit-picky for this point in revision process, but:
>you feel a tiny bit of skin and fat there
reads a little strangely to me. I would've gone with something like:
>to your surprise, you feel a bit of give, like he's got pudge there. Weird for such a skinny looking guy.

>>29169405
Thanks for your input man. I made your edits.

And for posterity sake, I'm >>29168649

Dash is a reverse trap who's pretending to be a boy, and will build into, in your own words

>Struggling against her own embarrassment at desiring to be soft and cuddled and spoiled like a girl is absolute peak Rainbow Unf.

>>29169216
>>29169227
So, this might be because this is out of context, but Anon is coming off as a total dick. Not in the understandable way he is shown in Fatal flaw, but rather in a really petty and obnoxious kind of way that makes me dislike him. In greentext writers are given a looser format where you are writing for a the reader's senses and the reader is the main character. This means any weird quarks or actions by Anon will separate the reader from the illusion that they are Anon. See >>29117764 where anon goes full sperglord and gets way too committed and "savior-ish" too quickly which not only separates the reader from Anon, but also leaves a cringy impression of his character.

A small nitpick: When anon elbows dash in the chest and gets her to buckle over, that's reads as a significant amount of force regardless of dash having hidden non-crotch boobs. This, again, makes Anon seem like a dick, but also should have drawn more attention in the scene. A normal character might be able to just write that off, but book horse is not that kind of character.
Twi's potential points of view:

>Anon just elbowed this dude who is now in an unusual amount of pain for a guy to be in.

therefore either

a: Anon is elbowing people way harder then he needs to.

or

b: Something is odd about dash

Either way it warrant's more attention from twilight than we get. Same issue appears earlier with the Super bitchy remark from anon "Probably cant afford a skateboard", but I just assumed that twi didn't hear it. Also, "a bit of skin and fat" is not what you would be feeling if you elbowed someone with hidden breasts.

Another nitpick: the ">Yep, that's _____ for you" line is already a bit on the nose and hokey, but if used sparingly can be totally fine. However, you used it twice in the first post, and it feels repetitive and like you're beating me over the head with anon's judgyness.

>>29169463
>but Anon is coming off as a total dick

That's kinda the point. At this point in the story, him and Rainbow Dash still hate each other. They almost get into a fight prior to this scene

Still, I'll take your critiques into account, because I think you raise a few valid points.

>>29169463

That all being said, It does show potential, and I'd like to read more once you're comfortable sharing.

>>29169483
>>29169227
>>29169216
Fug I'll just post the rest of that scene.
>And man, the whole ride you’re on edge
>You get to sit in the backseat, with it’s dried, flakey leather seat, whose seat belts scarcely work
>You pin yourself to a corner, hanging onto the door handles for dear life
>Twilight sits up front, not saying much of anything, but Dash, constantly glancing back and smirking, keeps beating down on the accelerator like it’s his dick
>He knows you hate how fast you’re traveling, and he seems to relish in your fear
“Focus on the road please!” You try and yell over his shitty stereo, but it’s no good
>You can’t hear yourself over the appalling roar of his music

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_Kn_YWXwC4s

>Which isn’t so bad, except for how LOUD it is
>The rushing charge of the bass drums pound against your ears
>The singer croaks and roars and you try yelling for Dash to turn it down, but he only skates into a hard turn, sending you tumbling
>Is this how you die?
>You roll back upright and plaster yourself against a door, white knuckling the frame
“JESUS CHRIST DASH!”
>Twilight looks back at you, having heard your squeaking over the blasting punk
>She wears a stoic expression, one that commands you to stop your belly aching
>For a heavenly second, Dash turns down the radio
>”Your pussy hurt, Anon? We can stop by the store and get you some tampons if you want.”
“NO, I-” But it was too late, the music was back on full blast
>You figure you’re going to be lucky if you can even hear anything after this

>>29169529
That's the end of what I have so far. I'm going to write more in the morning, hoping I improve and can even approach Mango's caliber

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>>29169529
>>29169227
>>29169216
Eh, not bad. I'll be waiting for more. Lord knows I love me some reverse trapdash

>finished fatal flaw
Feels like I need to go on a walk

>>29169430
I followed that.
Maybe I should've put those two chunks of reply together.
I'm glad you're working on it.
It's not bad, and in spite of my finding something to criticize, I recommend not fretting too much over details at this point.
Cold feet has been the death of more greens than bad writing, so I recommend you take the advice I haven't and just post what you got soon.
Maybe drop it on Writefags' Guild first ?

>>29169529
That said, another nitpick
You've almost got this structure here where we see some of Anon's reaction to the ride does it ever end? and then build up a picture of the trip.
This can be a solid tool, but I think you should implement it a little differently.
Mostly I'd start with a stronger reaction from Anon. Maybe move up the "hanging on for dear life".

Or instead you might also start out with dry irony after the last line. Something in the vein of:
>>Great! You get to see how shitty of a driver Dash is
[post break makes for a great beat]
>>Spoiler: he's not so good at it
>>At least the parts involving stop signs, speed limits and basic human decency
(build up description of ride here)

Anyways, like I said I like it and am looking forward to the full thing. Except for a couple sentences that are a little weird, like the one I mentioned, your basics of prose are in the better-than-adequate–to–good range, and my heart is inadequately prepared for the subject material.