Dadonequus: Children of Chaos

>>28908265
Why did the other thread died? Anyways, I'm writting my update so maybe I'll deliver tonight

Also, for Gumball, I did like your update and how you handled Mr and Mrs. Cake, how Anon is getting these weird sexual impulses when he sees other mares and how confidence is getting to him as if it was some unknown thing. Once again, he stole the show, not entirely convinced on your depiction of the mane 6 except for maybe Twiggles and Spike relationship. But then again, you have said that you are not going for a 100% accuracy, so I'll just have to wait.

For Erf, this whole sleepover thingy is adorable and cute. You can tell how much Diamond Tiara adores Anon and in turn, how much he adores her, what it came as a pleasant surprise is how much Chrysalis is enjoying herself with this, and those little hints at how much she wants Anon by her side (Not the dare that she made him to do, but rather her little advice on his shoryuken)

As for Wanda, the /fit/ seal was super fun to read and you brought the maximum pun. The Sweetie Belle part felt a little over the top, but then again, this is horseland. Still, I do get the feeling that he's really dumb by just following Discord's order without stopping to think about the consequences of his actions.

And for tentacles...well, I already told ya my criticism on the Discord chat.

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>>28908427
Yeaaaaaaaah I might have overdone it with Sweetie Belle.
Thanks for the feedback, waiting for that update.
Also pastebin chapter has been updated
...and added 1k lost that i forgot to write... whoops
http://pastebin.com/cNS0Ue0E

>>28908265
I want to fuck that Eris

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The lack of lewd content in these greens disturbs me.

I've read them all

>>28908677
>read them all
>missed the gentle tentacle rape of a filly
>dat uber lewd pillow scene

>>28908677
Makes me remember that I stopped mid writing when I was trying to write Erfanon raping Bonbon in the halloween arch.

>>28908697

>accidental rape
>pillow rape
>counting

This isn't satisfactory.

>>28908779
When she's was strapped to the table right?

>>28908697
>that lewd that erfanon stopped writting because he was a bitch about one Anon not liking it

>>28908806
Yeah, Anon was pretty much role playing as a bad guy
I had so many ideas like making Anon change his voice into that of Lyra, but it never came to me.
heh

>>28909008
Erf did lewd?

>>28909008
This.

It's wasn't perfect but I was getting into it. Fuck the haters and autistic prudes.

>>28909054
When I said that I had read all of the stories, I forgot about yours t b h. I tried getting into it and it had a good storyline but I just couldn't deal with the bad english. If you can you should get someone to edit it like you did your prison green. No h8

>>28909253
He tried but one faggot didn't like it and Erf got discouraged or something. Remember there are children on this board.

>>28908265
Old thread
>>28881637

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>>28909334
Someone helped me in the chapters 1 - 3 of prison, then it was all me.
I know my english is bad sometimes, but eh... I try my best.

>>28909253
Oh yes, I almost forgot that the spa twins almost raped Anon

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Hey erf, I'm really enjoying the way you write Chrysalis. The fact she actually, 100% sees Anon as her best friend now is pretty adorable, for a big evil bug anyways.

Is there a story for anon being a draconequus yet?

>>28909721
Nope, just Elo where another human becomes a (female) draconequus

>>28909713
thank you. i just try to write her as she would actually act

>"Then I have a very easy question. Which I would suppose would make us all winners. Would you marry my brother? When you're older?"
>UH WUT! C'MON!
>You blush at that question. As does Diamond Tiara as she starts to act shy "W-well...I'd like to of course. That is the truth.."
>Chrysalis nods, then smiles "Then I suppose that makes us all winners." She bows to Diamond Tiara as she stands "An excellent game, your excellency, wouldn't you say?"
>"Y-yeah...erm" Diamond Tiara was just looking at you, and when you noticed. you could feel your heart melt. Did you really like her that much? You must have. She's simply adorable. And yet, you still questioned a few things in your mind. Was this a wise choice? she was a little too young. Maybe you were just thinking more of her because you liked her. You just couldn't figure it out.
>"So. what's next?" Silver Spoon asked, ignorant of the fact you were both looking into eachothers eyes.
>"Oh!..oh right!" Diamond Tiara snaps out of it and looks to Chrysalis "Nymous, I do believe it's tea time"
>"I do believe your right" Chrysalis gets up and walks over to Diamond's dresser. On the top were cups and tea pots on saucers. You hadn't noticed it before. Though you did wonder...why were there two tea pots?
>As Chrysalis begins to lay out the cups and serve the tea. You took notice of the two tea pots. one was plain looking, which she used to serve herself and Silver Spoon. The other was adorned with jewels and gold embroidery. It was very fancy. and she used that one to serve you and Diamond Tiara. "My Princess and Prince, I do hope you both enjoy this special tea I brewed. This tea is one only royalty drinks. I hope it is to both your liking"
>Woooah, awesome! Royal tea!....wait. God, you hoped it didn't taste like pretentious shit.

>>28910053
>Still, it was amazing. Chrysalis was behaving herself and even being rather cool, if a little teasing. Maybe you were being too high strung. Eh, Starlight didn't know what she was talking about. She didn't know how tight you and Chrysalis were.
>You all take your seats. Hmm, the tea sure smelled good.
>"Is this really a tea royalty drink Nymous?" Diamond Tiara asked as she took in the sweet aroma.
>Chrysalis nodded "Indeed, nopony drinks it today however. It has been mostly forgotten despite it's importance in history, but I thought for this sleepover, it would be appropriate to make for the both of you."
>That's pretty neat. Hell, you even believed her. This must have been some old recipe she learned in one of her conquests. Oh mannnn, this is gonna be sweeeet.
>But first..
>You raise your cup
"Everypony, I'd like to make a toast to Nymous, for these drinks we are about to have and for her patience in being our maid"
>"Oh Anon, how sweet. You make me glad to be your sister" Chrysalis smiles as she raises her cup
>"Yeah, a toast to Nymous!" Diamond raises her cup
>"Yeah, I know right? Without her, we wouldn't even be right here, right now." Silver Spoon raises her cup, and the toast is raised.
>You all then drink.
>Well damn, this stuff was pretty good. pretty sweet and didn't even have that leafy taste most teas have.
>You look to Diamond Tiara to see what she thought.
"Hey, Diamond what do you think of the......mnn...waaaaa.."
>You look directly into Diamond's eyes and become instantly overwhelmed by feelings you didn't know were that powerful. You lost your ability to speak for a moment. Diamond Tiara was the same way, the moment you locked eyes. She just couldn't look away.

>>28910085
"My pwincess of cuddles, has anypony ever told you how beautiful your....everything is?" You say as you look at her dreamily. Damn, she was looking fine all of a sudden. Super good.
>Diamond blushed, but didn't shy away as she leaned into the table and looked deep into your eyes. "I was thinking the same thing, my pwincy wincy"
>Silver Spoon was finding it a little odd. She hadn't heard either of you use those kinds of pet names yet. But she was supportive, things seemed to be going good. "Wow, you both keep falling deeper for eachother huh?"
>You both just lean in closer, putting your foreleg elbows on the table as you both take a breath at the same time "Yeeeaahhhh"
>Chrysalis said nothing as she observed, and drank her tea.
>You hop off your little seat and near drunkingly wander towards Diamond. The moment you do, as if by pure instinct, she starts nuzzling under your muzzle "Oh my Sugawycoltmuffin, you always make every second of my life great."
>Your heart was thumping heavily. Her this close, this massive amount of love you felt, it was growing by the nanosecond.
"Same to you my Pinkcuddlepeach. Having you this close, it makes me the happiest colt in the world."
>You hug onto her and bring her close as you plant a kiss on her nose. Making her giggle.
>Silver Spoon just stared. It was so scandalous to her. She didn't know what would happen. But it was so exciting.
>You plant another kiss, and another. Diamond didn't know what to do with herself. She just let it happen.
"My jewel of my life, having you this close. I'd never ever want to be apart again."
>"A-anon.." She nuzzled closer. as you plant another kiss and pull in her body slowly close. sensually close.
"I want to love you, take care of you, be with you, I even want to..."
>You stop, and start to sweat
"..Want...to"
>Your mind was flooding with lewd thoughts. You didn't care who saw. You wanted to rip those clothes off and make love to her right here.
"W-want..t-to..."

tits. Gonna sleep, but good update so far

>>28910166
>Something was wrong. Did you ever love her this much? Maybe you wanted to do her..WAIT. WHAT ARE YOU THINKING?!"
>"To what? My wuzzlesnacky?" Diamond asks dreamily as she gives you a kiss on your cheek.
>You blush red, you almost do it. But you gulp, and shakingly tell her.
"T-to...need to..actually..talk to my sister...real..quick in p-p-private"
>"B-but, then we'd have to stop snuggling. I don't want to stop snuggling" She whines
>..oh, it was going to be more than snuggling if you didn't escape.
>"Talk to me in private? Whatever for?" Chrysalis asks, she actually seemed genuinely confused.
>Hell, you were confused. Were these what horse hormonal problems were like? You had to gently pull yourself away from DT. Which was a painful experience to not even be inches close to her. You had to force yourself.
"I-it's important...b-but...it'll be ok"
>You look to Diamond Tiara with a strained smile. and start to back up.
>She reaches out to you "But my snugglepoo,are you sure it's THAT important?"
>You quickly nod
"Y-yes....Nymous..please? Out there? please?...please?"
>"..hmmm..alright. I don't see why, but alright" She seemed impatient now. But kept her servant like composure as she bowed to Diamond Tiara "A moment my princess, please be patient as I speak to the prince privately"
>"O-ok" Diamond Tiara already had tears in her eyes "Please..hurry back"
"Oh, I will!"
>You try to assure her, already ripping yourself away from her
"I will"
>And you and Chrysalis step through the door and head a little ways down the hallway to speak privately.

>>28910264
ugh, again i'm pooped. it's this holiday week bullshit. only 4 posts...goddamit. sorry guys. we'll think of it as a..dunno

>>28910322
Perfect and most evil way to end it.

It sounds like the love potion from the hearts and hooves day, but is it? Find out next time on...

>>28910264
10/10

>>28910166
LEWD ALERT

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Requesting snuggles and hugs

>>28910973
Not gonna happen anon.

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Did someone say lewd...?

>>28908427
You make two people who said they liked the Cakes, and I literally put next to no effort on them, as they wouldn't be appearing in the story a great deal.
Perhaps I should stop caring about all my characters then...

The characters will improve over time, due to me getting back into a writer's mindset and my skill increasing. Right now they are all sort of ambiguous I know.
But when writers try to go for a 1-1 rendition of the characters from the show, it rubs me the wrong way. It comes off sort of hollow and fake. Even the mane six episode to episode vary and aren't exact.
I'm thinking my own rendition of them could benefit from more imitation, but that's all they are, a rendition of the characters. No matter who writes them they will be colored from the point of view of the writer himself. These are my understanding of how these cartoon characters would act if they were real beings.
And if I am going to be honest, half of the mane six aren't really full or interesting characters past their quirks or peculiarities. With the exception of early Twilight, which was phenomenal due to the overwhelming time spent on her, every writer had a different idea of the characters, and especially with later seasons, the writers weren't directed well at all.

>>28909008
Wait, what?

>>28909683
WAIIIT WHAT

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lewd where

>>28911648
WE WAITIN FOR THE LEWD

>>28911559
You! Give us lewd!

>>28910053
its happening

ITS HAPPENING

>>28911446
WRITE LEWD FOR US YOU FUCKING FAG

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>>28908677
>read this
>read thread
>read latest chapter
>read my now finished chapter

Welp, looks like everything in turning up lewd today.

>>28912519
No :^)

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>>28912543
WRITE LEWD

>>28894709
>You make it to the castle doors and head inside.
>A bit dark inside, but you already enhanced your vision, so half of everything is the normal bright castle.
>The other half is pitch darkness.
>It appears that the castle is still intact, even if Elune was left here on her own.
>You are generally surprised that not a single window or vase or well... anything wasn't broken.
>But that's only if this is the right place.
>You can never be too sure about these things now.
>You walk up the stairs and look both ways.
>Clear... clear...
>Must be asleep.
>You turn left and head to your bedroom.
>"W-Wait! Uh... turn right instead! I'm sure you'll find something a bit more... important! Yeah, important."
"But my bedroom is that way."
>"Oh who needs sleep anyways? Pfft, you don't even need sleep do you?"
"... No."
>"Exactly! Which means this would be prime time to go right!"
"But why right specifically?"
>"Because I want to! And whatever is over there is important!"
>Hmm... this voice is annoying.
>Like a child pointing at directions really.
>But since you don't have any other leads, you guess you can humor him.
>You turn back to the right and walk down the hall way.
>"Yes! Good, now keep going straight until you hear something! Something that isn't nothing. Hehaha..."
"Ugh... whatever you say."
>You continue to walk down the hallway, but mid-way through, you feel a sensation.
>As if something had just left your body.
>You're tempted to look back for whatever it was, but before you can, a noise comes from one of the rooms.
>Elune's room.

>>28912972
>You walk up to the door and check around you for anything out of the ordinary.
>Nothing... alright.
>You open the door.


~


>Yes! You did it!
>This is the room right? The one with that neat little symbol?
>Ah yes! There it is!
>Now... with a few scratches here and there with a little added dust and...
>Ack! It burned you!
>But...
>It's working...
>You thi-...
>Damnit! You didn't want a fire spell!
>Urgh... looks like we'll need the ingredients.
>Yes, he'll do nicely as a chore boy.
>As long as he keeps that simple mind of his of course.
>Until then, this will be your base of operations!
>Not as homely as the endless void, but it certainly is an improvement.
>And look at all the compact space! It's usually infinite!
>Such a great change if you say so yourself!
>What do you mean? This is the perfect workplace!
>Who cares about that? All we need is to make the proper spell and then we'll be back on track!
>Oh hush you! Since when did you ever have a problem with swapping dimensions? Never?! Hah! Thought so!
>Now be quiet while I do my magic! Hehahahhahahahhahhaha!


~


>Hmm... everything se-mph...
>Was that a pillo-ooph!?
>"Anon!"
"Hphm Mmmph."
>"Where have you been mister!"
>Elune shakes your already confused body to pulp before falling on top of you.
>"Spike said you were at school, but you weren't there! And then he said you were at the hospital, but you weren't there either! WHERE WERE YOU!"
>Nnnghaahh...
>Well... at least you're back to regular old Equestria.
"Ph mph mm smm mph tmm."
>Elune removes the pillow from your face and hits you with it.

>>28912982
>You were quite reluctant in taking the hit.
>Must be a reflex built from the carousel.
>Looking at h-... he-... hi-... her...
>The ceiling is bright with fluorescent stars, as if the night sky has been transferred into the room with perfection.
>Elune is literally sparkling in the light.
>Her mane matches the color of the stars and magnifies it's beautiful spectacle.
>And with her fur just a tinge more blue, it enhances the blue night sky.
>It's as if you're staring right... at a goddess...
>That is...
>Until you notice how flustered and... eh... cute she looks.
>All red and scrunching her nose in frustration.
>Is this what Discord had in mind?
>Or maybe it was something else.
>Either way, you have a strong urge.
>A very strong urge to... to...
>You boop Elune, causing her eyes to dilate for a second before her light flush turns into a deep crimson.
>She slams the pillow into your face again and two heavy weights hit you like guillotines.
>"Stupid! Stupid stupid stupid stupid STUPID NONZ!"
>With each word, she hits the pillow with an exponential force.
>It's a good thing you can't really feel it, that and the pillow is shielding most of the impacts.
>"Why do you have to be such a knucklehead?!"
>You push the pillow off of you and force Elune down to the ground.
"I have know idea whaaa...."
>Aaagh, why does she look ten-times as ador-ACK!
>And to make matters worse, you're starting to feel the same heat as before on your cheeks.
>Like as if something just kissed you.
>Something wet...
"Eh... what you... are talking about."
>"Er... well you... eep!"

>>28912985
>Elune scrunches her nose further and covers her eyes.
"What is it? Is something... wrong?"
>Jeez, why are you panting all of a sudden?
>"Ah... no! Everything's fine! Just uh... do you feel that?"
"Feel what? What are... you getting... at?"
>"Nothing! Absolutely nothi-anngh~"
>You try to move to see if anything is wrong, but you can't see anything wrong.
>But, you do feel a slight tangy sensation.
>Somewhere down in the lower region?
>Lifting yourself up elicits another gasp out of Elune.
>You look down and hunch your head a bit to look at the...
>The um...
>Uhhhhhhhhh...
>What... is that... thing?
>What is that thing!?
>How come you've never seen that thing before?
>Why is it coated in juices?
>Are those marbles too?
>What are you looking at!?
>Why is your head steaming just from looking at it!?
>Why is your head spinning!?
>U-ARE YOU PANICKING?!
>YOU'RE PRETTY SURE YOU'RE PANICKING!
>WHY ARE YOU PANICKING!?
>WHAT IS THAT THING!?
>WHY DOES IT MAKE YOU HOT!?
>DO YOU DESTROY IT!?
>WHAT THE FUCK I-AAGH!
>You are launched into the wall by what felt like a stray bullet.
>You... can't quite catch what's happening... but you imagine that... Elune just hit you.
>But that doesn't stop you from exhaling steam into the atmosphere.
>Your entire head is steaming from the intense heat.
>Your eyes are completely befuddled.
>All of your senses are crying out in confusion.
>You are at a complete loss for everything.
>You try to get up, but even your limbs have turned into noodles, limp and stringy.
>You fall back to the ground like a ragdoll.

>>28912994
>Remnants of steam still flow from your nostrils, but you're starting to regain some of your senses.
>"... Non? Non? You OK Non?"
"Ughagsgxghcckjrkepkwbskncbcncmv..."
>"I'll take that as a no."
>Elune sits on the floor and looks down at you.
>Though... you never thought you'd see four Elunes at once.
>Rubbing your eyes, your focus finally returns to you.
>Back on the floor.
>With Elune on top of you.
>Wonderful.
"Uh... Elune... what did we just...?"
>"No clue."
"You sure?"
>"Absodutelylutely positive."
"Uhuh... And the thing attached between my legs. What is that?"
>Elune freezes for a moment.
>"I uh er- well you could say it's like a umm... you know..."
>Elune motions her hooves in an intuitive sort of way.
"I do not follow."
>"Er... what I meant to say is... it's your umm... OK I have no idea!"
"Then what were we doing?!"
>"I don't know, but it felt really good and I didn't know if I should stop you or not, but it went in so deep and I just kinda let it happen and-"
>You cover her with your hoof before she could go on any further.
"Stop. As long as nothing bad happened... I think we will be... OK."
>You get up and try to lift up from the ground.
>But instead you get a face of fluff.
>Right, still on top.
>You grab Elune's sides and try to push her off, but your muscles spasm from lack of functionality.
>Causing her fluffed up chest to lean against yours.
>You stare into each others eyes for what seems like an eternity, hips locked together with no chance of escape.
>By now, an intense feeling has taken over.
>Your entire mind is starting to boil with heat.

>>28913000
>Your face is no less than the burning hot crimson of a red sun.
>Her face is coated in what you could only describe as innocence.
>Yet it drives you absolutely insane.
>Her soft flowing mane, her mellow blueish eyes, the distinct curvature of her body.
>Your body feels like it's being engulfed in wonderfully warm flames of woe.
>An intense urge is taking over your entire body.
>Morphing it.
>Your right eye transforms on it's own to a harsher more reddish version of your usual predator's eyes.
>Your hooves grow in muscle mass, pinning Elune to the ground in seconds.
>Your tongue slithers out to coat her in your juices.
>S-She even tastes ready...
>So... so sweet... so ripe to the touch...
>You can't help but cackle at the rare delicacy before you.
>Elune tries to get out from under you, but your vice grip is too much.
>"A-Anon! This is starting to agh... hurt!"
>Her gentle yet wishful command softens your muscles to an extent.
>If only to make your meal that much more... satisfactory.
>"Anon, what's gotten into you? You're starting to scare me."
"Heheheekekekeke... you don't have to worry... about a thing... you just have... to let this happen."
>"W-What do you-uh!?"
>You place a hoof onto her muzzle.
"Shhh... everything will be OK... it felt good right? That means nothing bad will happen, right? Which means you won't... resist, right? So lay there... and promise me... you will enjoy... every... last... second..."
>Elune can't hold in her long luxurious moans.
>You scope her body down to the very last inch, exploring to your heart's content.

>>28913012
>And with every pules between the two of you, the more this... urge grows...
>This strong powerful wonderful feeling!
>You... you need this feeling.
>Pushing her hooves under her head, you lock yourself in between.
>Your serpent's tongue dances with the elegant purity, her moans and gasps ultimately fueling your endless tirade on her spirit.
>Her plump treasure trove leaks with each pump into her hips.
>As if you're repeatedly ramming a hot iron into the water, the flow of steam and juices begins to coat the floor in a mix of effort and instinct.
>Soon, an array of tentacles begins to contort out from your body, wrapping themselves around her.
>With every strained hilt into her, the tentacles aid in Elune's attempts to keep up with your momentum, acting as leverage for her perfect body.
>You don't know how long this has gone out for thus far, but with the world itself being lost to your vision, it feels as if you could go on like this forever.
>But perhaps, that is not the case.
>You can feel... something...
>Something hot...
>It's almost surging from the surface of your very being, begging for sweet release.
>A very peculiar yet... absolutely wonderful feeling.
>As if you are about to reach the most spectacular climax.
>And you can almost tell by the way the both of you rotate your bodies...
>You both want this...
>You nearly triple your efforts on her luscious body, trying in every way possible to release this intense feeling into the world.
>Elune's moans turn to begged yelps, your own turning to intense heaving.

>>28913019
>Your eyes close to focus on the this most important in this little world.
>You can feel it.
>It's almost there.
>Just a little more...
>A tiny bit more... before....
>You hear a knock on the door.

And we got lewd!

>>28913026
Fuck off, cancer.

>>28913026
I need a towel

>>28913012
L-lewd

that was turrible

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>>28913026
>>28913123
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>>28913655
>>28913918

Rrrrreee how am I supposed to get my rocks off if I can't read about a spawn of the eldritch nearly raping a massive-eyed female horse child?
Truly you are the worst 'internet troll' for so masterfully baiting me with such a titillating concept and then snatching it away before I can time my own orgasm with his culmination inside her stunted horse vagina exclamation point

Ahhh he my day is ruined now.

>>28914443
I realy dig this update, keep going Gummy!

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With all this lewd discussion I wonder if I should finish that Anon rapes Bonbon one-shot

>>28914443
>>28913026
Jk, I actually liked how you handled this, keeping the confusion and spirit of anon alive throughout the lewd. You kept description fairly tasteful, and I liked how you diverted with the knock on the door.
Could have been overly smutty, could have been stupid, what you did was the way to go as far as I'm concerned.

>>28915000
I personally am not the biggest fan of lewd, but if others dictated what we wrote, none of us would be here writing fanfiction about my little pony of all things in the first place. Do it if you feel like it bro.

>You look left and right, up and below and still, you couldn’t find a hint of the madness that took over Ponyville just some moments ago.
>Like yeah, there were still some scared ponies, but for the most part, the Royal and Night Guards were doing a pretty amazing job at putting everyone at ease…well, at least you were still in Luna’s warm embrace
>Discord steps forward and snaps his talons, making a podium with a microphone to appear ”Well, I admit that it’s a pretty disappointment look to see everypony forgetting about the little fun time that certain somepony made them go through, but oh well…” Discord shrugs “That’s what happens when you use cheap chaos...everypony ignores you and just wants to go back to the better brand”
>Discord eyes Eris, who just responds to his little tease by sticking her tongue at him. She tries to come close to you, but Luna’s glare made her flinch in fear, conforming to just resting on a nearby chair.
>You are taken aback by that show of distrust…
“Come on mom, she’s not bad…she’s a big jerk, that I know, but she’s not bad, at least give her a chance”
>Luna just shakes her head and smiles at you “While I have given her the benefit of the doubt, that still doesn’t mean that I’m not angry or bothered by what she has done to this little town, besides if she wanted to see you so bad, there were another ways to do it, instead of…what she did…”
“Yeah but-“
>”We’ll discuss that later, my dear…” Celestia interrupts you “Right now, our top priority is to give everypony the news that they are safe and have nothing to fear anymore”
>You look at both of your mothers with a pleading look…to which Celestia just responds with a bonk on your head
>”You know that acting all cutesy won’t work with me, my dear…” Celestia giggles “Still, you’re welcome to try all you want…you are so adorable when you get angry…”

>>28915292
I'll have to ask you guys to wait a littl longer, forgot to edit this chapter. Will take me like 2-3 hours

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>>28910264
Fuck, this sleep over is delicious . It's good to see Chrysalis was being perfectly honest when talking to anon in the hallway prior, Mu-wa-hu-wa-ha-hahaha.

>>28913026
Cookies, you're earning your creamy milk quota with this one.

>>28914443
And Gummy, nice update-- I mean the actual one. I don't think you have license to worry about characterization of the characters. It was gud main.

>>28915000
Trips command it, wando! Bon bon must be raped, anything less wouldn't be prudent.
>>28915388
Do your thing it a thingie thang!

>>28913026
>>28915021

I have to agree with the writefag who never updates, I'm glad you didn't go the generic way. The lazy way, in which I am guilty of following. Cheap boner is cheap

Yet, it's obvious that this is your first time writing lewd, as it was rushed.

You went the right direction where the feelings were so overwhelming that Anon couldn't tell what was going on, but it still needed a bit more to it.
The whole idea was to make it so Anon doesn't know what sex is. You can still add some more visual detail to the situation, while avoid making it a porno.
That's the problem. Once the reader realized they were fucking, it was already almost over. If you're going to take this style, it has to be longer and descriptive in the right areas.

Also, you have to put the input of the other party. In this case, Elune on the receiving end.
Well descriptive on her features, but not her actions. It's so sudden when she eventually got into the groove. Her thoughts and actions AT that moment, not before or afterwards.
Only hint of emotion or action I got was generally confusion, lust, and innocence. These aspects should have been delved into more deeply to show the passion growing.

And I thought Anon was supposed to be learning about human emotion?
Caught me off guard how menacing he acted over the lust. During a heated passionate moment like this, human lust isn't something evil or devious as Anon's behavior.
Unless the route you're going is that Anon's 'inner edgy demons' made him act like that. Then, well uh... Guess you did it.
Yet, it ruined the whole 'innocence' and 'first time' vibe. If you wanted him to take lust in THAT direction, like I said, needed to be more drawn out and explore WHY he took that route.

It couldn't be that all this time he had some semblance of humanity dormant in him that is awakened when... Oh no... OH FUCKING NO

>>28915792

Now just to finish off on a good note, because that last post seemed to be nitpicky and critical towards the flaws of your first lewd.

Like I stated before, glad you took the creative way. It's refreshing, unlike my rehashed garbage of the millions of lewds on FIMfiction
Anon learning how to be more emotional through this experience is very well thought out. It will really teach him what passion and love is.
It actually felt natural, and maybe it just might be my biased fetish, I liked how you made him use his 'powers' to aid him on his 'quest to please le filly'.

The way you need to take this is like a dance. Both parties are involved, and each one has to be described and talked about, physically and emotionally.
You were close to that, just need more practice.

Now that I gave my two cents to Ivan the polish Cockfish...

GUMBALL, WHERE IS THE FUCKING UPDATE?!

>You look left and right, up and below, but to no avail, you couldn’t find a hint of the madness that took over Ponyville just some moments ago no matter how hard you tried.
>Like yeah, there were still some scared ponies, but for the most part, the Royal and Night Guard were doing a pretty amazing job at putting everyone at ease…well, at least you were still in Luna’s warm embrace
>Discord steps forward and snaps his talons, making a podium with a microphone to appear ”Well, I admit that it’s a disappointment to see everypony forgetting so quickly about the little fun that a certain somepony made them go through, but oh well…” Discord shrugs “That’s what happens when you use cheap chaos...everypony ignores you and just wants to go back to the better brand”
>Discord eyes Eris, who just responds to his little tease by sticking her tongue at him. She tries to come close to you, but Luna’s glare made her flinch in fear, conforming to just resting on a nearby chair.
>You are of course taken aback by that show of distrust…or more like disgust
“Come on mom, she’s not that bad…Eris might be a big jerk, that I know, but she’s not bad, at least give her a chance”
>Luna just shakes her head and smiles at you “While I have given her the benefit of the doubt, that still doesn’t mean that I’m not angry or bothered by what she has done to this little town, besides if she wanted to see you that badly, there are another ways to do it, instead of…what she did…”
“Yeah but-“
>”We’ll discuss that later, my dear…” Celestia interrupts you “Right now, our top priority is to give everypony the news that they are safe and have nothing to fear anymore”
>You look at both of your mothers with a pleading look…to which Celestia just responds with a gentle but firm bonk to your head
>”You know that acting all cutesy won’t work with me, my dear…” Celestia giggles “Still, you’re welcome to try all you want…you are so adorable when you get angry…”

>>28915843
>”Indeed…” Luna starts to giggle too as she nuzzles into your mane “Especially when he puffs his cute, little cheeks! He even gets a little red and looks like a small tomato! And he’s so cute and adorable that I just want to hug him more!”
>You blush at that…that was a lie!
“I-I’m not cute! Handsome? Of course I am, dashing? Without any doubt! But cute! That’s for little girls! A-And I don’t puff my cheeks!”
>”Really?” Celestia asks with a snarky grin “Then what’s this?!” She starts to poke your cheeks and then your belly, giving you tickles….
>Goddamn you hated being tickled! But you can’t stop it! Luna was holding you and Celestia’s attack was too fast and powerful to even think of stopping it! Nooooo!
“Ahhahahahahah! S-S-Stop! P-Please!”
>Celestia smirks to Luna who in turn smirks to you “Not until you say what we want to hear, my little star” Luna whispered into your ear as she held you tighter
“HAHAHAHAHAHAH! N-NEVER! AHAHAHAHAH!”
>Celestia shrugs and chuckles “Then I guess that I simply won’t stop…”
“AHAHAHAHAH! O-OKAY! HAHAHAHAH! OKAY! You win! I’m cute! I’m the cutest colt of them all! HAHAHAHAHAH! Just… AHAHAHAAHAH! S-Stop this!”
>”Aaaah, much better!” Finally, Celestia stops her little tickle barrage and caresses your mane “But come on. Was it really that bad? Because I don’t think that admitting the truth about your cuteness will make you look less radical…”
>No! Noooooo! Fuuuuuck! You may have won this battle, mom! But you haven’t won the war! You weren’t cute! You were handsome! HANDSOME!”
>Luna though, looks completely baffled… and laughs ”Tia…I don’t think that ponies use the word “radical” anymore…”
>”Really?” Celestia asks unamused by her sister’s jab “The pony who still thinks that using the Royal Canterlot Voice is totally fine and not out of touch is giving me a lecture about what’s in and what’s not?”
>You look at Luna worried that Celestia’s words might have taken this a little too far…but what happens was completely different.

>>28915869
>“What do you want me to say?” Luna gently shrugs and nuzzles once more into your mane “I connect better with our younger subjects than you, dear sister. Maybe it’s time for grandma to get with the times…”
>”Ugh, give me a break…” Celestia groans and gently places her right front hoof on her forehead “I’ve seen so many fads come and go…and return… and go again… ugh… I guess that I’m too cool for school, right?”
>You, Luna and everyone else cringes at that…and hard
>Luna just slaps her face and shakes her head in disapproval “Sister…just…stop…”
“Yeah mom…that hasn’t been cool for a long time…even in my old world saying that, was just…just don’t say that phrase again, please”
>”Well, excuuuse me for at least trying! Hmph” Celestia blushes and turns away “You will see, I will have my little comeback…I will be the coolest mom that has ever…oh dear…”
>You get a little surprised by your mom suddenly stopping her little rant…until you notice that everyone was looking at you.
>You look to Eris who was just baffled by the little show…in fact, everyone was. They were just staring at the three of you… trying to think what just got into you…
>Well, they can suck a cactus because you were enjoying your little family moment…
>”What?!” Luna barks at the rest of the group “Have you never seen two mothers spending some time with their foal?!”
>”Luna…please…” “Let’s…leave this for latter, right now there’s still some work left to do…” Celestia sighs “I will do my best to put everypony’s mind at ease, and when I finish with that…” She whispers to Luna as Celestia gave her a defiant look “I will surpass you at being cool, because you can bet your little cider collection that this won’t end like this…”
>Luna gently shrugs again and hugs you a little softer “Whatever you say, big sis…but yeah…I suppose that the best route of action is that you give one of your little speeches before the situation gets out of hoof, we don’t want another Fillydelphia situation after all…”

>>28915875
>Wait a moment…just Celestia? That’s weird, because…
“What about you mom Luna? Why won’t you join mom Celestia in her speech or whatever she’s going to do?”
>Luna opens her mouth to speak but is quickly interrupted by Celestia who whispers to the both of you “While I could tell you why Luna doesn’t give public speeches anymore… “
>Celestia looks to Luna and gives her a smug grin “That would involve telling you about a certain incident in Manehattan, and I don’t think that you are old enough to hear that tale…”
>What
“What”
>Luna can’t help but to yell at Celestia ”You are always exaggerating things! It was the cider speaking and you know that, Tia! I-I mean!” Luna’s cheeks goes red, and tries to get over with the conversation “T-Tia! I-I think that you better hurry! W-We don’t want more worried ponies, right?…”
>Celestia rolls her eyes and chuckles “I will my little sis…” and then she finally walks up to the podium….
>Celestia looks at the crowd of ponies who had gathered around the town hall, and despite knowing that their princesses were here, most of them looked pretty nervous that more chaos shenanigans might happen in any moment
>This could make anyone nervous and crumble under the pressure, but your mom was standing with such a powerful expression, with such confidence, that you couldn’t help but to admire her even more.
>Celestia closes her eyes for a moment, taking a deep breath and finally, she speaks with a voice loud but clear, kind but powerful, like how a leader should address her people…or ponies in this case

>>28915892
>”Ponies of Ponyville, ponies of Equestria!” She finally starts, getting the immediate attention from everyone in the crowd “Today I come to you not as a princess, not as the pony who I thank every walking day that you call your ruler, no. Today I come to you as another pony who just like everypony else in here, was worried about the well-being of her loved ones. I know the fear that you must have felt, I know that you are looking for somepony to blame for what you just went through… but I urge you to stop and reconsider your position”
>Celestia gives the crowd a gently smile, one of those that could warm even the darkest heart “Think of the values that we as ponies hold in the highest regard: Friendship and Harmony. Those two wonderful things need a difficult, yet vital aspect in order to be realized: Forgiveness.
>Celestia pauses for a moment, and when she finally speaks again, she adopts a much more humble tone ”And that’s something that I shall ask you to do today. We have faced many challenges in the past and it was thanks to these values that we have overcome every trial, it is thanks to these values that Equestria can exist, so I ask you today, my little ponies, to remember what makes Equestria such a wonderful place to live in”
>With a face that was nothing but humility, Celestia asks the crowd one final question “So I ask you right now, will you to look into your hearts and forgive the mistake that has been committed today?”
>And the crowd response didn’t took long, every single pony erupted in a cheer… seems like ponies are thankfully devoid of the malice and desire of revenge that humans usually has…what a wonderful world this is…what a wonderful life you have…

>>28915907
>Celestia bows to the crowd, eyes closed and a smile on her face “Thank you my little ponies, every second of every single day, all of you always fine the way to make me proud of being called your princess.”
>Celestia looks at the crowd once more, and asks one final question “Now that we have overcome another trial, why not continue with the festivities?”
>The crowd erupts in cheers once more…oh man, your mom for the save! The carnival was still a thing!
>Celestia looks at Discord and nods, making him know that it was okay to bring everything back…which he does with a snap of his talons…
>The stained glasses, the wonderful buildings and districts, the shops, the stands for musicians, everything was back!
>Once everyone got their mojo back and started enjoying the festivities, once the music started to play again and the ponies danced to their rhythm…Your mom stepped out from the podium and into the town hall “Everypony, please follow me…”
>Everyone follows your mom without hesitation…except for Eris who stays behind for a little starring at the ponies who were now going around as if nothing had happened…
>What could she be thinking? You would need to ask her later if she was okay, and how she was taking everything
>One she makes sure that everyone was inside the town hall, Celestia speaks “I know that everypony wants to join the celebrations too, this has been an stressful day to say the least, but please, before you go, I have one final thing to say, and that’s only for you my friends to hear…”
>Everyone stays silent, waiting for the next words that Celestia would say “Kind Flutteryshy, would you be so…” Celestia giggles “kind as to step forward, please?”
>This takes everyone by surprise, and Fluttershy even more “I…uhhm…okay….” The yellow Pegasus shyly flies forward, landing with some hesitation in front of Celestia “I…uhhh…”

Regarding Erfs story, doesn't she have enough sense to realize that the potential gains for using a love potion are offset by the risk of Anon losing control, breaking Mr.Rich's rules, or anon having a complete meltdown and airing all the dirty laundry?

>>28915922
>She rubs her left leg with her right one, trying to hide her face as much as possible “I-I mean, what do you need me for, y-your highness?” Fluttershy offers a bow to Celestia
>Your mom gently rolls her eyes, and places her hoof on Fluttershy’s shoulders “As I usually tell my son, there’s no need for such formality, especially among friends…”
>”O-Okay…” Fluttershy gets up…slowly…and very…very…awkwardly “I-I’m sorry…”
>”There’s no need to be sorry, my friend…” Celestia replies with a smile “But I do have something to ask you…”
>”O-Okay…” Fluttershy replies with a lower voice volume
>”Oh for heaven’s sake…” Celestia places her hoof on her forehead shaking her head “I MEAN…” she clears her throat “Kind Fluttershy, you have once succeeded in reforming a spirit of chaos, you actually performed your duties so well that, as far as my understanding goes, you two are now really close friends, am I right?”
>”Oh, you mean about Discord?” Fluttershy’s ears perk up, forgetting some of her shyness “Y-yes, we are very good friends, I-I actually wanted to thank you, your highness…I know how Discord can be, b-but he doesn’t mean ill a-and I’m so happy that you gave him this opportunity to prove that deep inside him, he’s actually a g-good draconequus who just wants to be friends with everypony…”
>You see Discord smiling by Fluttershy’s words, rubbing the back of his head…for once he didn’t say anything to praise himself, for once he just limited himself to enjoy that little show of affection.
>”You will have to thank my son for that too” Celestia looks at you and gives you a little wink before focusing on Fluttershy once more “But that will have to wait, as I said, you showed the spirit of chaos himself what the magic of friendship is and the blesses that it entails, that’s why I can’t think of anypony more fitting for the job that I have in mind…”

>>28915941
>”Oh, it wasn’t a job, really…Discord has always been so nice to me, b-but…uhhm…I-I think that I shouldn’t interrupt you, your highness…I-I’m sorry…I-It’s just that…well…I will accept anything that you want me to do…”
>Fluttershy looks away and lets out a little whimper “U-Unless you want me to hurt a little critter…I-I could never bring myself to do that…s-sorry…”
>Celestia slaps her face and groans ”Why everypony always thinks that I want to deal some sort of punishment…No! What I wanted to say was that if you think that you could take care of Eris…of course, you would need to report back to me with letters about your progress…”
>”What?!” Discord immediately intervenes, teleporting right in front of Celestia “You can’t ask poor Fluttershy to do-!”
>”I-I will!” Fluttershy replies before Discord can finish his little objection
>Discord turns to Fluttershy, you could tell that he was worried sick about her well-being “Fluttershy, you can’t really be thinking about…”
>”I am and I will!” Her shyness now is gone completely. Fluttershy takes a step forward, looking at Discord dead in the eye “Discord, please…just look at this poor girl…” Fluttershy flies to where Eris was standing
>Which was on a nearby wall, just looking at the little scene and having her share of laughs “Wha-? What’s going on? Who are you?”
>”Oh poor thing…” Fluttershy gently caresses Eris hair “you are so confused about this new world that you don’t know what’s going on…”
>”Knock it off!” Eris teleports away from Fluttershy and growls “I’m not an idiot, alright?! I just wasn’t paying attention! That white dudette is more boring than a rambling about physics from the dork over there!”
“Hey! My ramblings are educational and fun!”
>Eris snickers and rolls her eyes “Half of the time you just get mad by something that you read on a magazine and the other half is always about something that somebody else said, and it’s always because...”

>>28915963
>And then your bitch of a friend makes a high pitched voice so she can mock you ““Ooooh! That doesn’t fit with what my super-duper book of nerdy stuff says! Oooooh! That makes me so mad!”
“Oh come on! I don’t get angry by little things like that!”
>”I’m afraid that she’s right, my little star…” Luna replies
>”Indeed…” Celestia joins her too
>You look at both of your mothers completely flustered, and insulted, how they could take the side of that bitch that happens to be your friend since high school!
“Oh yeah? Well… I dare you to name ONE time when I did such thing! That’s right! You won’t come up with anything because I’m always cool”
>Luna rubs her chin and then playfully replies to you ”How about the time when I raised the moon and you got angry because that didn’t happen in your world?”
>Celestia gives you a stoic look and answers you in a similar tone ”How about that time when you got angry at Moon Dancer when she showed you the Starswirl glyph system?”
>RD flies over you, trying to contain her laughter ”Yeah, now that you guys mention it, the squirt got all worked up when I mentioned that he should exercise more!”
>Even Aegia joins the conversation ”Your mozers are right, Mon petit, you do get angry or annoyed wiz easy, like when anypony calls you by your title…”
>”Which one?” Luna asks with curiosity “You mean his royal title or the one that he always dreams about? Where my little star has a degree and he has graduated from the best institutions?”
“T-That’s not a fake! I-I really have a Ph.D. in quantum physics!”
>Eris looks at you…emotionless and raises an eyebrow, before sighing and replying with a tired voice.
>”Oh geez, is he really still going with that? I thought that by this point he would’ve already dropped his little make-believe game ”
“It’s not a game! You know that! I’m a great scientist! And you worked as a security guard!”

>>28915972
>Eris rolls her eyes and shrugs ”Yeah, and I was a rock star, and a firefighter and even an astronaut once…you do have a lot of imagination when we play, I’ll give ya that…”
“B-BUT!”
>Eris laughs a little and gives you a mocking smile “Seriously! Everyone else dreams with being a superhero, or a cop or you know…a prince! But you always kept going on about how you were the best scientist in the whole wide world” She snickers “you really can’t get dorkier than that….”
>You narrow your eyes at Eris and growl
“I AM a scientist! And I am the best!”
>”Of course you are my little star!” Luna gently nuzzles into your mane “You will always be the very best for your dear mother! And I’m sure that one day, you will make that dream to come true!”
>”What dream?” Celestia asks with confusion before gasping “Ooooh! I remember! You told me about that, right Luna? The one where he dreams about having this super powerful lab from the future, and working there and having this “Mini-freezer” thing right?”
“Hey don’t mess with my mini freezer…ugh…forget it”
>”What lab? You mean the AOSR?” Eris asks to your mothers with confusion “How do you know about that?”
>”Yes! That one!” Luna nods frantically “It has this impressive train that moves on its own, and it goes to a place that is as big as Canterlot itself, and is built in the middle of a dessert!”
>”Yes…” Eris was becoming more curious about the conversation “But how do you know about that?”
>Luna giggles and hugs you a little tighter ”You see, just like a draconequus, alicorn magic is special in its own right, and mine allows me to see everypony dreams, and that building of fantasy was in my little star dreams!” she says with excitement before kissing your forehead
>You look at your mom with some desperation; you couldn’t believe that they didn’t believe in your awesomeness

>>28915980
“I-It isn’t a fantasy! I-I worked there! E-Eris too! Tell them!”
>Eris raises an eyebrow and shrugs “Sure! I mean, that place was a real thing in our world!”
>”Really?!” Both of your mothers asks in excitement…forgetting about the “little” job that they were supposed to give to Fluttershy…or about anyone else in the room
>”Yeah…” Eris calmly nods “We went there like…I don’t know…” Eris rubs her chin “Twice? They had these neat guided tours…but they were expensive like you can’t imagine, still… I got the money to take my little dorky friend there because he was soooo into that kind of stuff…and because he wouldn’t stop annoying me about that…I even bought him a little model of the whole facility…by the way what did you do to it, dork?”
>The rest of the group lets out a collective “D’awwww!” everyone except for Discord, who still was as baffled and frustrated as you…
>You were so confused, so frustrated that you couldn’t muster any word to properly express your emotions
“I….I….”
>”Ahh, I see…” Eris looks away with some sadness and sighs “I guess that it got lost forever along with the rest of our world…”
>”Awww, don’t be sad Eris, please…” Fluttershy hugs her with all the kindness that she could give “You don’t have to worry about anything now, because your little friend is here, a-and we are here too! A-And if you allow me to do...well…I-I’m sure that I could give you a new home…”
>Eris doesn’t teleport away this time; she was…surprised by Fluttershy’s kindness “Really? Even after everything that I did to your town?”
>Fluttershy nods “O-Of course! That’s what friends do; they forgive and help to each other! And we are your friends, right girls?” Fluttershy looks to the rest of her group
>Oh fuck, you expect everyone to react in a similar fashion to how they did with Starlight, but…they actually agree…they were 100% behind the idea of giving Eris a chance…oh thank god!

>>28915987
>”See Eris? Now you have more friends! There is no need for you to be so sad and angry anymore…just… enjoy your new life…with your old friend AND your new friends” Fluttershy says as she hugs Eris a little tighter
>”I…well…okay…I guess…” Eris actually returns the hug and even nuzzles a little into Fluttershy’s mane “Thanks…wait!” Eris suddenly stops the little tender moment and looks at Celestia
>”What about my magic? I’m well…I’m….”Eris growls “I’m not that good with it! Okay?! I still can’t control it very well…yet…and I don’t want for you and the other laser pony to come and kick my butt every single weekend…”
>”Well then, you don’t have to worry about that, I have something planned for that too…” Celestia looks at the angry Discord and gives him a little smug grin “Because Discord will be responsible for you, and by that, I mean in terms of your education in how to use your magic properly and with responsibility”
>”WHAT?!” Discord and Eris yells at the same time
>Celestia looks at Discord and smiles “But of course, Discord you are an experienced user in chaos magic, in fact, I don’t think that there’s anypony else who can use that brand of magic…besides Eris of course…so, who better than the spirit of chaos himself to teach the young Eris how to use her magic?”
>”You can’t do that!” Discord yells
>”I can, and I just did…you have the experience and based on how Fluttershy speaks about you, I’m quite sure that you also have the maturity to teach this young draconequus about how to use her magic responsibly…”
>”O-Oh yeah! I-I could help with that too!” Fluttershy quickly intervenes, looking more and more excited about the idea
>”What a wonderful idea!” Celestia says with a smile “I’m sure that you will be of great help to Discord in the education of Eris”
>”Mmm-hmph” Fluttershy happily nods “Just leave it to us, Discord and I will do our best to teach Eris about how she can use her magic to help everypony!”

>>28915998
>Eris growls but complies with the order nonetheless “Whatever…Ugh…I knew this was too good to be true...but fine…whatever…I’ll do it…Ugh…at least the yellow one will be there too…”You bet that she was going with this because she doesn’t want to get blasted a third time
>”Very well, everything is set an all parties have agreed, now if you excuse me…” Celestia turns away and starts walking towards you and Luna…but Discord had other plans…
>”Well, well, we have gotten a little bossy, haven’t we?” Discord rapidly teleports in front of Celestia and gives her a defiant glare “And I have to ask, where do you think you’re going? We haven’t finished yet! You can’t just order me around like that! Do you know who I am?!”
>Celestia just raises an eyebrow and looks at Discord unimpressed “Yes…you are Discord, the grumpy spirit of chaos…” Celestia gives Discord a smirk “Are you having confidence problems, my friend? Maybe you could try having a different hobby, you know, one that doesn’t involve being an angry old pickle”
>Discord’s left eye twitches and his eyebrows explodes into flames, he pulls his face very close to Celestia’s and growls ”What… did… you… say?”
>But again, this doesn’t seem to have the desired effect that Discord hoped for since Celestia just giggled “Seems like you are getting rather old, my chaotic friend, because your hearing seems to be worse than the one of a hydra…”
>Celestia closes her eyes and shrugs “But oh well, I guess there’s nothing we can do about it…now, step aside please…”
>And Discord just got even angrier by your mom’s casual attitude ”Do you think that you can speak like that to the spirit of chaos?!”
>Everyone takes a step back, Discord was really, really pissed off which made everyone except for Celestia to actually get a little scared…including you
>Why was she acting like this? Oh man, Discord is really emotional, if your mom doesn’t calm down on her smug show, then she will have major problems with chaos

>>28916003
“M-Mom, maybe it would be a better idea if…”
>But you are hushed by…Luna?! She gives you a kiss on your mane and whispers into your ear “Hush my little star, let us have this moment of victory…”
>Victory? Victory in what?!
>”Meh…” Celestia shrugs
>”That’s it! Let’s see if you still think the same when I transform your mane into cotton candy!” Discord snaps his talons…and nothing happens “What?!”
>”Look again…” Celestia replies with a smile…and you with that you could have a camera to always remember Discord’s face when he saw his talon and paw surrounded by your moms’ golden and blue auras…
>Discord snaps his talons…and once more nothing happens, he turns to Celestia, his anger was…rather hilarious ”Celessssstiaaaaa! What is the meaning of this?!”
>”Oh, Discord!” Celestia playfully says as she walks past him and caresses your mane “You really need to do something about those anger issues, trust me, stress can make an old pony to look even older, as for your question…” Celestia gives Discord a little smirk “I guess that with this little…conflict I’ve stretched some muscles that I really never got the chance to use in like…hmmm”
>Celestia rubs her chin “I don’t know… how long has it been since the dragon lord thought that it was a wise idea to try to take over Cloudsdale? I think that it was like a couple of centuries ago, or was it five?” Celestia giggles “I think that my memory is starting to get a little hazy…”
>Discord turns to Luna, who was giving him a more regal and defiant grin “And what about you? Why did-“
>”Keep quiet, spirit of chaos!” Luna yells at him, making you in turn to cover your little ears with your hooves “Did you really think that I’m a weakling? I have faced many dangers and creatures before and after you! Besides…you do get predictable” Luna gives him a smirk of her own “You are not cool anymore, dude…”

>>28916012
>Okay, hearing Luna saying the word “dude” was…disturbing and awesome at the same time…but Discord, man, he just got blow out of the fucking water so hard that it was delicious…
>Discord opens his mouth, but is quickly interrupted by an amused Eris “Oh shut up, you big doofus, they got ya and good…” She turns to you and then looks at Luna “Hey dork, I changed my mind, seems like you “mums” are way cooler than I thought” She stretches a little and yawns “But honestly, let’s get over with this, alright? I like to see the old man getting flustered but…I’m starting to get bored…”
>Now Discord’s anger was directed towards Eris…who smiles at him and sticks her tongue at Discord too, and once again, before he could say anything, he’s interrupted by a certain yellow Pegasus.
>”Uhm…Discord…please, would you calm down?” Fluttershy flies and looks him in the eyes with a pleading expression “Please… Just do what Princess Celestia says…would you do it for me? Pleaaaase?”
>Discord crosses his arms and huffs “But I don’t want to-“
>”Discord!” Fluttershy gives him a glare…a scary, angry glare that makes everyone, especially Discord to recoil in fear
>Discord nervously nods ”O-okay…I’ve thought about what you said and balanced every argument…and I think that for this time, I will do what the good Princess says…”
>And with that, the atmosphere of tension was completely banished…for what happened during the rest of the day and the following one?
>Well, not that much, your mothers actually let you stay another day in Ponyville, and thankfully Aegia was still assigned as your bodyguard. Despite everything that happened, Luna and Celestia considered that she did a good job at keeping you safe and sound
>That night was spent in Applejack’s farm, sadly the little banquet was cancelled because of what happened with Eris…all of you had to conform with apple pies…amazingly tasty apple pies.

>>28916022
>You really couldn’t do much after the small celebration, you were so tired that you had to go to bed right after you finished eating....which was too bad because Applejack’s family seems like a bunch of good fellas, especially that gently giant of Big Mac
>The next day was spent with Rarity, Rainbow Dash and Applejack since Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy were too busy with teaching Eris about Ponyville, you didn’t mind that much, but you still wished to have a little of more time with your old friend
>As for Discord, he just banished…no one knew where... just that he wasn’t around, not even to make the big closure for his carnival, which Celestia had to do in his place.
>And as for Twilight and Starlight….you don’t know what happened between those two… but based on the fact that Twilight requested a private meeting with your mothers…and then walked out of it like twenty minutes later looking completely flustered.
>For all you could deduce, they got close, like really close, Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy also defended Starlight…to some extent, but never as hard or as passionate as Twilight. But it didn’t really matter, Luna’s decision was final, and Starlight was going to be submitted to a trial…
>Not that you cared that much…maybe…Twilight did say something about not giving up…and she was a princess too…which means that she has resources…and she’s intelligent too, which means that she knows how to use those resources…
>But that will be a worry for another day, for when the trial actually arrives. Right now, the carnival was finally over, and you had to return to Canterlot, to your new life…and to explain your mothers about your cutie mark since you asked them to not make any question until after you had returned to your home…
>Now the chaos carnival was over and it was time to return to your normal life…if you ever could…you had a cutie mark in harmony…and Catherine was now the young…and sexy draconequus known as Eris…hmmm…what will the future hold for you?

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>>28916028
Well, this marks the end of the chaos carnival. I hope that you guys liked it! I actually hope for your feedback not only for this update but for the arch as a whole, what did you like? what you didn't like? what do you hope to see next?

I liked it

>>28916060
Sorry, I'm still a few updates behind but I'm sure it will be good, like always!

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>>28916314
Hope you enjoy it m8!

>>28916028
Banished should be vanished.

>>28916060
The tone and pacing feel just right.

>>28916028
Get the fuck out.

>>28910264
>"So, what exactly is the problem Anon?" Chrysalis says as she watches you fidget, fighting the feelings you had.
"S-something's w-w-wrong with me...I dunno if it's hormones or what. B-but..ngh...I went from liking Diamond Tiara to really l-loving her..."
>"That sounds about right. So what exactly is the problem? You do want her, don't you?" Chrysalis really did seem confused by your actions.
"Y-yes..I want her..in bed..no clothes..I want to MAKE love to her sooooo bad. I don't even know why!"
>"Make love?" Chrysalis puts a hoof under her chin as she begins to wonder "Hrn, Love poison is supposed to amplify love only. I guess that explains where that increase of lust came from. Must have a unique effect on somepony like you, hm?" She didn't look at you maliciously however. She really was wondering why it was happening...or maybe she was pretending.
>Wait.....
"LOVE POISON?! YOU POISONED ME?! W-WHYYYY?!"
>Chrysalis chuckles "Why not? It's clear that while your ability to charm a lady has improved, you still don't have a grasp on how to seal the deal a-"
>You just explode into rage and charge right at her.
"I'LL GRASP YOUR DEAL! RAGH!"
>You charge at her, but she holds you back by keeping her hoof on your head. You try swiping at her, but you just couldn't reach.
"I'LL KILL YOU!"
>She just remains silent until you start to tear up, and begin crying as you slump down and snuggle on her leg.
"Oh god, I miss her already. Oh the pain! W-why did you do this? Why? I thought you were really having fun. Why the evil scheme?"
>Chrysalis rolled her eyes at your accusations. "Please, this is just a scheme. Nothing evil about it. And yes, amazingly enough. I have been enjoying myself. The little filly has a rather humorous hold on you and I find her to be one of the few ponies I can actually tolerate, but that perhaps, is probably due to being your friend."

>>28916829
i do like my net dying within a single fucking post

>>28916854
Bad Internet.

>>28916028
Glim getting to prison for kidnapping a prince wouldnt be so the great deal, she just wanted to change his ideals and stuff, i dont know why you wrote glim going offensive agaisnt him tho, phd is just a kid and glim is not retarded.
Too much smuglestia
Eris is fine
Had laughs in eris telling about anons world

>>28916920
>too much smuglestia
That's never a bad thing

Eris a best

>>28916920
>PhD is just a kid
But he's not

>>28916829
kek
its still fucking chrysalis
she may be your friend but she still has a sociopaths way of thinking

>>28916890
worst still. the internet is still out

>>28918685
>Cuban internet

>no filly

>>28919785
We lack fillies

>>28920079
we don't need fillies. girls are icky.

>>28920165
What we need are mares

>>28916578
Noted

>>28916586
>The tone and pacing feel just right.
Thanks m8 I do what I can

>>28916587
Only if you come with me ;^)

>>28916920
I have to disagree there with you Anon. Starlight kidnapping the little prince should be a big deal at least in terms of a commited crime, as of why she went to the offensive, she didn't tried to "hurt" PhD, she tried to steal his cutie mark after her brainwashing attempt failed and PhD got into her nerves with her smugness, then batmilf came and knocked her out cold, GlimGlam got back up and tried the same but now to the little prince and the fucking general of the royal guard. She fucked up hard in that regard.

But don't worry Starlight WILL return

>>28920802
>Starlight WILL return
o yip yip yippie i can't waitwoohoo

she's my favorite character

>>28920165
this
boyz rool gurls drool

>>28920929
Don't worry babe, I've got ya covered

>>28917952
Yes he is

>>28919008
net still dead

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>>28916060
>but for the arch as a whole, what did you like?
The descriptions of discord's chaos stuck out to me as pure win. Aegia, PhD and the CMC, and Eris were all especially good.

The close here with Eris and the celestial bums teasing the shit out of Anon, and Eris running it to a new high of sadistic mockery was very amusing, many a kek were had in that scene.

> what you didn't like?
That it's over? I dunno.

> what do you hope to see next?
Eris! Cherry dreading and loathing the Eris. Flutershy taming the Eris. The Eris being Eris until Sunset Shimmer is rammed into the story like a 16 mega ton warhead detonated under a mountain scale mass of strawberry jelly swirled with just enough chocolate to keep the quivery mass from slumping until the bomb hits. Namely, after Twilight left Sunset behind the mirror, things too a turn for the deranged. The butterfly effect is amplified in cyclic resonance within the perpendicular dimension where each Equis and Earth exist as PhD knows them.

In turn, the trans-dimensional memo pad shorts out and Sunset can't contact Twilight. How she wants to, what with the Call of Chuthula horrors emerging from the Everfree forest and chunks of Canterlot going missing, seemingly endless pits of billowing darkness where entire city blocks once stood.

And worst of all, the Eq.Earth's one world government has been making study of Sunset and the events surrounding her for the past 3 years. And now that shit is getting fucking whack, they are looking for answers. Answers Thru vivisection.

There is no cooperation possible. What the agency wants is her brain matter on sub-mm slices dyed and examined.

On the bright side, amid the dimensional distortions, magic has grown considerably stronger-- but not strong enough. With no hope of victory, Sunset places a ward on the mirror to Equestira as she leaps thru, battered, breathless, with barely enough energy to warn the nearest pony before collapsing. PhD.

Then, PhD saves a dimension. kek

>>28922349
>Equis
What

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>>28922468
You know equestrian? Eques / Equis (as a bastardization, got to bastard that latin!) being the root, I duno, just seems like a reasonable name for the pony planet/dimension where it dwells.

Pony dimension works too, I guess.

Here, take a weird sunset picture for your troubles.

>>28922349
I'm glad that how the aesthetics of the carnival came off were liked. I wanted to portray Discord as an artist of his craft, a true genius of chaos instead of just making random stuff to happen.

And that also helped a lot to justify later on why PhD defended Discord against Starlight and his argument that harmony can be born from chaos.

At the same time it served to show the massive difference of Discord's skill, experience and knowledge against Eris' raw power but lack of everything else (at least in my opinion).

I'm happy that Aegia was liked, that people liked my rendition of the mane 6, I loved writting topcunt, Rarity and Applejack and had tons of fun imagining the CMC

>>28921889
Shit really?

Will there be clarification on this when net comes back?
>>28915932

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>>28921889
>net still dead
In the end, it was not the eggs that got our Champion Erf, not even the insane middle manager many a lesser Anon would have cut the brake lines of her Car before working under her another day, not even the bitter chill of Florida's winters where it even almost freezes almost sometimes! Not even the assassin doctors hired by Hasbro to bring us to a new level of no-fun-allowed.

No. The net got him. Tangled him up good. Then the poachers were on him in an instant more, well armed with dildos and duct tape and a live duck ducking ducky. The faggot king was heard to have eaten well that night, dining on poached Erf and egg.

>>28922652
But, my-- how careful you are to ignore the sunset madness.

>>28922863
I CANNOT BE STOPPED...but the update will be rather short

>>28916829
>You just couldn't compose yourself as you continued to sob. To you, she wasn't making sense.
"B-but why the poison? Whhhy?"
>Chrysalis gently pulled her hoof and looked down at you with disgust "Stop your moaning, it's depressing."
>You just lay there and whimper, not only did you miss DT...who was wasn't even that far away. But you felt betrayed. The poison's effects were ravaging your thoughts.
"W-why?"
>Chrysalis sighed, she lowered herself to sit in front of you and actually started to pet your head. Despite the gentle gesture, her tone didn't match. She was definitely not liking your reaction. she was annoyed. "Why? Let me hope that this gets into your fucking skull because what I have to say is the truth. She's a filly Anon; a young kid. She adores and admires you because you are her hero and her prince. But all of that is childish folly." Chrysalis's tone begins to soften to that of a motherly sense, and yet, slight irritation still lingers. You look up at her, sobbing, as she looks down at you. Her expression, it made you feel both safe, and some dread. Like she was going to tell you something you didn't want to hear. "As she grows older, she will mature. Her priorities and responsibilities will increase and change. Her likes and dislikes will be different. And, she will want a Stallion who can provide for her, listen to her, and be with her without the bullcrap childish shit you pull"
"B-but, won't I grow up to?"

>>28923120
>Chrysalis shifts her eyes to the right, for some reason, the truth of the situation made her feel embarrassed for you "Yes, but given you've already done that once and failed....I felt I had to help you...with my scheme." Chrysalis sighs as she looks forward, disappointed with herself "I can't believe I said the words "Help you" without irony"
>Help you? wut?
"B-but how does poisoning me help?"
>"Simple, the poison enhances love to a level ponies can't fathom. But this light dose will make sure you both will have control over yourselves and have memory of this night. For Diamond Tiara, she will look back on this sleepover as a moment of indomitable feelings of love.Her heart will swell when she looks upon this night....as long as she never finds out why anyway.." Chrysalis pokes at you a little aggressively so you get the point "I trust you can keep your yap shut, right?"
>You...actually had no moral qualms with this. You wanted a secured wife. You liked Diamond Tiara...sure fuck it. the plan is perfect.
"N-no, I'm totally fine with this...ngh..it just hurts not to be with her right now..."
>"Then let's just go back in. Don't say a word. And I'll make sure you don't do anything stupid. Just keep your lust contained, will you? You'd be ruining more than your chances at a wife if you fuck this up"
>Right...right..calm down.
>You suck in your tears. You stand. and you get over these feelings...but still..one last question as you pack it in.
"You're really having fun? Does that mean....you're enjoying your time with me?"

>>28923122
>Chrysalis twists in disgust when you say that "When did I say I was having fun? I'm not answering that you little...." She turns her face with a scrunchy face "As I said...friendship to me is different. You're only getting a free pass due to the car. I already admitted I'm enjoying myself. I'm not about to tell you I'm enjoying my time doing these silly things with you. I only enjoy my time with you when it's at MY leisure"
>...you were still punch drunk with love to act smug about that. But you were sure that was a lie, she must actually be having fun with you...and, in her own way. caring about your future.
>As you both head back into the room. You both step into Silver Spoon setting up a phonograph as Diamond Tiara stands waiting a few feet at the door, her eyes becoming half closed and dreamy as she gazes upon you. "Annnooonnnpooooo, guess what time it is?"
>....uhhhh
"....I-I dunno my delicious morsel, what time is it?"
>But Chrysalis already knew what was going to happen, and does her false smile as she looks down to you "Ahhh, young prince. It is time to dance with your princess"
"Ohhhh, that sounds..."
>OH FUCK! NIGGA WUT?! YOU CAN'T DANCE! HOLY FUCK, YOU WERE GOING TO DISAPPOINT YOUR LOVE OF YOUR LIFE BECAUSE YOU ARE SHIT AT DANCING! THIS IS THE WORST POSSIBLE THING THAT COULD HAPPEN! WORSE THAN FEMINISM AND THE N-GAGE!

>>28923160
and Barbara Streisand

>>28923160
Hey, erfnet came back, I was worried for a moment that the third world was claiming erf bacl

>>28922495
I'm with you, but I prefer to spell it as 'Equus'.

>>28916060
Right, forgot to give you feedback. This whole arc marks a high point to everything else I've read of your story, from the appearance of one of Anon's friends, to the appearance of his cutie mark and his next steps in his evolution the taken. So all in all you can be assured this was a success.
You already know most of what I didn't like (and her name rhymes with 'Barfight') but for the latest update, I felt ya took Smuglestia over the top more than a little. It was Smuglestia, but it didn't feel like Celestia, you get me? Plus that whole confrontation at the end with Discord didn't feel natural to me.
That being said, the two sisters arguing about cool was super cute, as was Eris teaming up with everyone to rag on anon a little.
By now you know I'm quite nitpicky, so I want you to know you've done a great job with this arc!

>>28923160
If that's all for this update, then Erf Anon is making me a little upset. His attitude towards claiming diamond tiara really disturbs me.

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>>28923685
>His attitude towards claiming diamond tiara really disturbs me.
ha, faaaaaaaaaaag

>>28923685
You have to remember that erfanon is a mini-discord. He sees stuff like a puppet master would, so he has to do everything to not lose DT

>>28923823
>>28923880
I'm not attacking his story, I love it in fact, and I understand why the character is that way and it only makes sense. But that being said, at the end of the day when all is said and done, Erf Anon is still a little shit.

>>28924254

So gummy, what do you think about PhD? Has the childification hitten him so hard that we must call him a kid or can we still call him an adult in the body of a kid?

>>28924359
who cares what that shit thinks lol

>>28924359
I don't think so-
>>28924388
REEEEEE
>>28924359
Anyways, as I was saying, I don't think we can call him an adult after this latest update. Where he completely forgot his fake backstory in favor of vehemently proclaiming he in fact had a PhD and was a super cool scientist. There wasn't any rhyme or reason to it, he was just acting like a kid who wanted to be recognized. Coupled with all the other times he's lost control, he is definitely more colt now than man.

I would say that now he's gotten his cutie mark and with how he has been acting and thinking, I would say this arc marks a good place to redefine him as primarily a kid again, albeit with lengthy previous life experiences.

>>28924416
I'd say the turning point was with Starlight's brief brainwash

>>28923685
>not claiming your waifu as your own
What are you, Swedish?

>>28924254
Such is the way of the mini-Discord

>Yfw PhD even thinks like a pony now

>>28924416
That's the plan actually His worries about the childification banished because his adult mind got lost before he could even begin to think about a way to reverse it, such is life but you could take that as PhD losing that little battle, there's no turning point now...Discord is well aware of that, and he still will look for a way to push the little prince into the chaos side. As for PhD being redefined as a kid, I plan to take some breathing time and tackle a little more into his school life and his interest in exploring Canterlot a bit more

>>28923511
and its out again. we'll see how things look after work

>>28925974
R I P

A lil bump

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>make one comment about the lack of lewd at the beginning of the thread
>writefags start writing lewd
>mfw

>>28916028
Your anon is a cuck.

>>28916028
When more bat pone?
Also bump

>>28927900
Don't worry, I have something prepared for that and is coming very, very soon

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>>28923055
>I CANNOT BE STOPPED...
Because you got the power! What power? The power of voodoo! Who do? You do!

I'm cheating on my wifu with your development of Chrysalis. She's entirely your character at this point, and is awesome.

I've said it before-- I think?-- but the way you've softened Chrysalis up over time is excellent, standing far above any 'good' Chrysalis take I've read. Whatever, it bares repeating; you dun gud, son!

Anon's Extra reaction to the love potion was well played as well. Surprised Chrysalis is best Chrysalis.

>>28923160
>ou both step into Silver Spoon setting up a phonograph as Diamond Tiara stands waiting a few feet at the door
I can't be the only one who read that phonograph as porno graph, or am I that drunk?

> Spoon coughs into her hoof prior to flourishing before the graph of porno selected for this night.
> Diamond's diamond hard lady boners can scarcely be contained any more than any other metal as hard has the hardest metal:diamond-- beyond her heavy breathing parted lips and heavy eyes tickling the graph before her.
> "And you see right here, my princes? This is COCK."
> And with that Spoon smacks the graph with her pointer stick and Diamond swoons on que,
> Spoon doesn't miss a beat as she continues "And this goes in here, HARD!" Finishing her point with another whack on the graph
> Anon stands quibbling in the doorway
> Chrysalis notices his twitching and furrows her brow at the sight. Clearing her throat loudly she shoves Anon toward the drooling Diamond.
> Spoon and Chrysalis looked on as the retards became one slathering mess of cringe inducing love making.
> That evening Anon betrayed his first love, the pillow. The consequences were never the same.

>>28923685
>m with you, but I prefer to spell it as 'Equus'.
Now that's a royal bastardization, how about Equaus? Sounds like your squawking as it rolls off the tongue.

> AWK-AWK EQUAS!
>>28927411
Verily, you're the hero we need; Anon.

Is erf updating tonight?

>>28928831
a little bit. I'm a little broken, but the net problem is solved. No more outages. soon holiday week will be over...until christmas week

>>28923160
"...like I need to have one more chat with my sister"
>Already the thought of walking out on her again burned through your soul.
>"Hmmm? What now?" Chrysalis asks, once again confused.
>Diamond Tiara already looked hurt from your words "B-but...don't you want to dance right now?...I-I don't think I can wait again"
>Shit...your heart! YOUR HEART! She looked so depressed from you wanting to go again. You wanted to rip yours out and give it to her. But...you had to hold fast. But you couldn't resist going up to her and kissing her on the lip-....cheek...CHEEK.
"No worries my most beautiful princess, it will only be for one more moment. And I promise, you'll be very surprised when I come back"
>You try to remain calm through your sweat. But she buys it, blushing as she holds her hoof to her cheek, she just drunkingly tilts to the side "O-ok"
>You rush up behind Chrysalis and start shoving her out with your head before she could even react.
>You didn't care to be surprised that she went out with you as you close the door with your back leg.
>A little further and that when Chrysalis makes her move. She shifts to the side, making you fall face first to the floor. She was just waiting to be out of Diamond's sight before she figured out what the hell was going on.
>"...Anon, what now?!" She seemed a little peeved "Dance with her already! Why are you hesitating? Why are you fighting the poison?"
>But you weren't....you just..
>you slowly lift yourself as you look towards Chrysalis with begging eyes.
"C-chrysalis...It's not that..I-I need your help..."
>Chrysalis raised her eyebrow, she looked pretty unamused. "Help? Why?...What's wrong?"

>>28929222
>You look down in ultimate shame as you slowly and gently spin your hoof along the ground.
"I-I can't dance..I need to learn..for her..."
>Chrysalis nearly loses her cool at that. She found that to be utterly ridiculous. "Are you kidding me?! You are a pony who has been in the company of five royal leaders where such an art is important. For Tartarus's sake Anon, even Discord has a certain mastery of dance! How could you not know how to waltz?"
>But something about that sentence bothered you enough to make you lose attention. Five royals? You started to count as if you had fingers.
"five? I dunno, I don't really hang around Shining Armor that much"
>Chrysalis puts her hoof to her face before growling at you menacingly "I MEANT ME YOU IDIOT!"
>You nearly double back from that in fright. But wait...if she IS the fifth.
>You immediately drop your fear as you smile at her, and your happy smile becomes a little smarmy as you nudge her.
"So you can teach me then? Super fast? Hmmmm? Can you? You know you want tooooooooo~, do it for your bro. Your buddy. Your super good friend Anon"
>Chrysalis couldn't believe this act you were pulling. Well at first she couldn't believe it. It was clear the love poison was having a VERY different effect on you, even with a light and temporary dose. She would have expected you to beg and be scared. But you immediately bounced back, doing anything you can to learn to dance quickly to please your marefriend.

>>28929247
>Chrysalis sighed, teaching you seemed impossible right now. But, she wouldn't let herself be a failure here. Not for your sake, but for her own. The food she was ingesting and saving for her hive was too delicious to just give up. And then there was you. Now that she was "Nymous". She didn't want to be known to have a "Brother" who couldn't fucking dance after being called the "Hero Colt". And finally, there was the friendship itself. As much as it pained her. Her Ferrari was one of the nicest things she ever had. For that, she felt that she could help you with this..just this once.
>"Alright..." She figures something out. She still had some of her power in this form. But it was faint and weak, very minuscule. Unsuitable for anything grand. But, she figured she could still possibly use her extremely weakened hypnosis to implant something into your mind. "Fine, I'll do it. But only because this is too pathetic a display, even from you. I can't let it go on." Chrysalis steps back and raises her hoof as she looks into your eyes "I can't teach you how to dance this quickly. But I can teach you to do this particular dance if you pay attention. We only have enough time to do this once. Your marefriend won't last forever."
>What?! ONCE?! But you couldn't do it in one go!
"You can't be serious. My memory isn't that good! How am I supposed to learn it in one go?!"
>"Easy..." Chrysalis points to her eyes "I'll use my hypnosis on you as we dance. You'll need to focus and let yourself become prey to it however or it won't work. You won't fall under my control, but it should be enough to make sure you won't forget what you've learned. Understand? Just try to keep your mind out of the gutter and you'll be fine"

>>28929312
>new router
>working better than ever
>actually on a roll despite it being late
>net dies


FFS

>>28929312
>You gently bring your hoof to Chrysalis's and prepare yourself.
"So just....focus?"
>You look into her eyes as she nods. You notice that green glow..it seemed...pleasant. "Yes.." Her voice becomes a little softer,sweeter, nicer. "Just focus on me, give in, and I will get you through this"
"..ok...teach me"
>You put your faith in her. For some reason, when you looked into her eyes. You swear, just swear, that you could see that she cared enough for you not to see you fail. It actually made you feel a normal sense of warmth outside of the poison's effect. It was like..she was being your sister.
>"Now, do as I do. and listen to my words. We start with three steps to the right and a turn..."
>Chrysalis starts taking you through the motions. You focus on her eyes and pay attention to her movements. You weren't entranced, but your focus on learning felt heightened as everything was being committed to memory. Since chrysalis was acting as you, she spun you around every other three or two step before making a turn. She tried to lead you along carefully with her words as she took you through the waltz with her steps. You could almost hear music being formed in your mind as she took you through it. At the end, she let's you go. And bows. You then follow suit, since that's what you were supposed to be doing. You'd expect Diamond to curtsy.
>And the most amazing part was...
"Woah...I actually remember the entire dance....weird"
>Chrysalis chuckles, feeling proud she was able to get that much out of you "Yes well, I am amazing"
>amazing...was the right words for it. You go in and give her a sweet little hug for everything she's done for you.
"T-thanks Chrysalis, I feel super relieved that I can please Diamond now. And it's all thanks to you."
>Chrysalis slowly pushes you away with disgust on her face "...Don't do that. It's humili-"
>But she stops and immediately pulls you in all of a sudden with a hug of her own.

>>28912631
Phaggot.

>>28929388
>Then, you hear the familiar southern business voice of Filthy Rich behind you. "Nymous? Anon? Now what's going on here?" Filthy seemed pretty concerned about something "I thought I heard yelling a few minutes ago. Started to get worried....Everything alright?"
>Shhhiiiiiiiit!
>But Chrysalis just kept you into a gentle hug as she gave him a falsely sweet smile "Indeed Mr.Rich. I was just teaching my little brother a little waltz so he may dance with your daughter. As for the yelling, it was just him being...nervous. It was definitely him yelling. He's shy about dancing."
>"Is that all? Hmnnnn" Filthy rubbed his chin, he seemed to have found that odd "Well, I would have thought, being around royalty such as our very own Princess Twilight Sparkle that he'd know how to dance. Then again, that is a little worrying. Don't you think a dance is too much for this little ole' sleepover?" He was also of course, concerned.
>You kept silent as Chrysalis continued to speak to him. She shook her head to his words. And continued to smile "I wouldn't think so Mr.Rich. It is of course, a dance based off this little royal scenario these two have made. As long as I'm here, it won't be any more than that. If anything, it's just cute. Wouldn't you agree? I'm sure Diamond Tiara would, she is looking forward to it after all"
>Filthy stayed silent for a moment. contemplating on that. He didn't want to upset his daughter. And dancing, in that regard, probably wasn't TOO bad of anything. He then chuckles about it "Well, I suppose not. Perhaps I'm being too much like those old fathers who coddle their children too much. If it'll make my daughter happy then I don't see a problem. But do try to get them to bed soon, will you Nymous, a sleepover ain't a sleepover unless you're actually sleeping over."
>Nymous bows courteously to him as she still holds you close. "Of course Mr.Rich, I will make sure everything stays on course"
>

>>28929415
>"Thank you Nymous, you're quite the wonderful mare. Gonna make a stallion very happy one day, I swear." Filthy gives her a small nod and yawns "Well, I gotta head back down and finish looking over these reports.You two have a good night"
>You do exit Chrysalis's embrace to say good night to him, Chrysalis herself, of course, bidding him a pleasant night.
>Filthy thought about opening the door to say goodnight to his daughter and Silver Spoon. In fact, he almost did. Until he silently mutters "..No, better not. Don't want to upset her"
>Filthy then heads back downstairs. He felt he could survive not saying goodnight to his daughter this one time. He didn't want to ruin the fantasy. And felt she was in very good hooves with Nymous around. He'd just make it up double time when he sees her in the morning. He was sure she was going to tell him what a great night she had and that it was all thanks to him for letting the sleepover happen. He even smirked when he thought about it, feeling he was such a good dad.

and thats it for the night. thank god the net came back

>>28928422
... it's not a bastardization at all, it's the genus of horses and zebras and donkeys, and is the proper Latin for horse, you dum dum. Cars are named it and a magazine dedicated to horse-rearing is called EQUUS.
Pronounced 'eck-wuss' so it rolls off the tounge.
No I am not calling it 'Equaus'. That's dum, you dum dum.

>>28929421
I'm glad your internet came back too!
This update was nice, with chrysalis acting like a wingman.

>>28929421
Time to get back to his pwinces of cuddles

>>28929581
I just call it planet horse

What would each Anoncolt do if an Anonfilly was introduced to them?

>>28930214
PhD would try to get info about her (Where does she comes from, if she was a human, etc) as for his reaction, it all depends on how her personality would be

>>28930214
i did a greentext of this

>>28930214
Now that's a very interesting, and dare I say important, question.
What would GumAnon do indeed...

>>28930834
Nothing because he's gay

>>28929421
Chrysalis is my favorite not-pony.

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>>28930541
erf i read that i fapped but i regret it ever day

>>28930541
>•-•
>reads a few lines lines in
>ohnomysides.jpeg
>reads just a little further
>whygodwhy.jpeg
...
Nope
Nothing wrong here!
I'd give it a solid kek out of nope

>>28913026
Every time I see your name I keep reading it as Cockfish.

>>28931801
More like cuckfish

>>28931801
I'd put a cock in that fish.

Chicken that is.

>>28930980
What about Thorax :^)

>>28932566
What about him?

Anyways, before we move on what's next for PhD, Luna and Celestia, Eris, Discord and everyone else, I decide to make some sort of epilogue, if anything to serve as closure for the chaos carnival. After this, I plan to this a time skip (unless I hear too many convincing arguments against that) which will be rather vague, because what's coming is a date with Cherrywood and the Grand Galloping Galla

>>28916028
>You arrive to Canterlot at night. Your moms were of course with you, but instead of they going to work, or the three of you going to have dinner…both Luna and Celestia insists that you go to their private garden…
>You haven’t been in here for quite some time…since the first day you arrived to Equestria…and sadly you had forgotten about how beautiful this place was.
>A garden of fantasy, impossible by any natural law from Earth…
>But it was different than the first time too, and the reason for that was because the colors of the every piece of flora in this place changed their colors at night.
>The grass was of a dark shade of blue except on the very tip of every blade where they adopted a fluorescent cyan.
>The trees were gently flowing with the nocturnal breeze, glowing with that same cyan that the grass displayed, sometimes they varied with a darker purple and others their glow came from the vines that grew out of their branches and touched the ground.
>Those otherworldly and yet exquisite flowers also displayed a fluorescence of their own, creating a small rainbow of glowing colors like pink, red, purple, blue, green and many, many more…
>The pond that was at the center of the garden now served as a perfect mirror for Luna’s perfect night sky.
> You had a faint of urge of submerging there, as to feel like if you were diving into the stars and the great beyond…
>”We haven’t been here for a while, haven’t we?” Celestia asks with a gentle and motherly voice as she walks past you, resting below that same tree who served as witness of the formation of your little family
>”Indeed we haven’t, such a shame, I have so many fond memories of this place…” Luna replies with a melancholic voice, she hugs you and flies with you in her tender embrace to where Celestia was resting…

>>28932849
“Yeah…I have been here only once before…I can’t believe that I almost forgot about this place…but….I do have a question”
>”Is your question related to why we are here?” Celestia asks with a playful tone and boops your nuzzle
>As if it was a reflex, you scrunch your little muzzle and nod to your mom…
>Celestia closes her eyes and lets out a gentle chuckle “Knew it…” she sighs “Well…Luna, why don’t you start?”
>Your lovingly blue mom nods “Of course, Celie…” She gently puts you down on the ground but not before giving you a little kiss on your forehead “You see my little star, while technically this isn’t the place where we first met, this IS the place where we knew about the fate of your old world and where you graced us by accepting to become our son, basically when our small family was officially formed”
>Luna looks at her sister for a moment before returning her gentle attention to you “As you know, it is my duty to protect everypony’s dreams and my sister takes the job of making those dreams come true, and yet we had always have a dream of our own that we could never fulfill, that is, until we met you…we dreamed with having a foal to call our own, but you not only have made that dream to become true, but you have made reality even better than our century-long fantasy…”
>Celestia stands up and walks to you, standing at Luna’s left “And you have accomplished that by being the best son that we could’ve hoped for…that we could’ve dreamed of and we say that not only because of the constant display of love that you give to us…but also about who you are…and what your destiny entails…”
>Destiny? Are they talking…about your cutie mark? Your mind was filling up with question after question, but for this time….just for this time…you would keep your mouth shut and listen to everything before saying a word.

>>28932857
>Celestia sighs and makes an awry smile “Now…please don’t think that we think of you as a tool, our words doesn’t have such meaning, in the brief time that we’ve been together we have grown to love you, my sunshine, to love you more than anything else in Equestria. And that’s because you are our son, and there’s nothing that can change that…but…”
>Luna speaks once more, standing up too, her face still gentle but more serious than before ”But the events that transpired in the past two days have revealed something far bigger about you that we could’ve ever imagined…” She gives you a gentle smile “Once more, you made reality to surpass our dreams…”
“Are you talking…about my cutie mark?”
>Your two mothers nod at the same time, but it is Celestia the one who speaks “Precisely, everything about your cutie mark, from how you obtained to its meaning is something that I’ve never seen before…” Celestia lets out a little giggle “Exactly like the pony who bears it, if you ask me”
“But…I’m sure that it’s not that rare isn’t? I’m sure that others have gotten the same cutie mark as me”
>”My little star…” Luna continues “A cutie mark that represents harmony is not something that you could define as common. Celie and I have lived for a very long time, and while I spent some of it paying for the sins I committed in the past, I have to agree with my sister, your cutie mark is something unprecedented…” Luna sighs “And as such, your special talent, the primary thing that makes you shine with a different light than other ponies is also something that has never seen before…”
>”And yet…” Celestia speaks this time, taking a step forward “I do not think that this happened without a reason, as I told you one day, I believe in fate, I believe that it was destiny itself that brought you to us…and that same destiny might be tied to what your special talent is…”

>>28932860
“But…moms…I-I still don’t understand…why give me this talk? I-I…I’m sorry…I love you two too, and I’m always happy that I’m your son…but it’s just…I don’t understand…”
>”Because…” Luna gently caresses your mane “It has come to our ears about how you deny your title, and why you do such thing… my little star, it fills me with proud to know about the humility with how you act, but even that has to have limits…I’m afraid that you can no longer run away from your position as the prince”
>You take a step back, looking at Luna and then to Celestia, you shake your head
“B-BUT! … but… I don’t want to just being known as a prince…I don’t want to constantly live under the shadow of my own title… I don’t want for my merits to be ignored in favor of just me being a prince…I…I…I’m scared that I will just being known as the son of Princess Luna and Princess Celestia…and nothing more…”
>”And you won’t…” Celestia gently takes you into her warm embrace “I promise you that you won’t get dragged down by your own title, and you know why?”
>You shake your head as you nuzzle into Celestia’s chest
>”Because your words, your deeds, your actions and everything that defines who you are as a pony is what defines your title not the other way around. The word prince means nothing unless the pony who holds it gives it a meaning”
“I...so…I have to work hard, right?”
>You feel Luna joining the hug, she nuzzles into your mane and whispers into your ear “That is correct, every day, every minute… you have to give your very best and nothing less, even more now, since ponies will look at you in search of advice and guidance…you have to be their rock”
>Celestia helds you a little tighter, speaking this time ”Aegia told me about the kindness that you showed when helping that old mare in her time of need, and how you valiantly protected those three fillies when they were in fear…”

>>28932880
>And Luna whispers once more, in that motherly tone that you loved so much “Moonlight has told me about how you became her daughter’s brightest hope, about your bravery when facing a pony who was clearly superior in the use of magic…”
>”Believe it or not, we heard your speech in Ponyville… ” Celestia giggles “And while you do need some advice in public speeches, we were thrilled that you defended the spirit of chaos despite his constant teases, that you could see beyond that barrier that Discord places around him and saw the good heart that he holds…”
>”And of course, your cutie mark that symbol that says what you stand for…” Luna whispers as she nuzzles a little into your mane “Harmony is one of the fundamental beliefs of everypony in Equestria…you represent that...and so, your life will now take a different path, one that you might have not imagined and that will surely be filled with challenges to overcome…but you will surpass every single one of them, of that, I can be completely sure”
>”But as Luna said, even humility has its limits, my sunshine…” Celestia breaks the hug to look directly at your eyes “You have to start accept that ponies will start to look up at you from now on, that you will be no longer just another colt, you are now a pony who is in charge of spreading harmony, and I hope that you will become a pony who unlike many others in the past won’t have a title that is just an empty word“
>Celestia’s look was serious, powerful…moving ” But I’m sure that you won’t become like them, and I’m sure that your fears will be nothing to worry about, because…” She closes her eyes and smiles “After all, the Prince of Harmony has done nothing but to make reality to surpass dreams, right?”
>You don’t know what to say…this was overwhelming…far too much to ask for someone like you…you were just a scientist…or were just a scientist…maybe…maybe they are right?

>>28932883
>You slowly nod
“I…I understand…I promise…that I will do what I can…No…that’s never enough…I’ll do more than my best! I’ll make everyone proud and I’ll make my moms proud too!”
>Celestia takes you into her sweet embrace once more “I know you will, my sunshine…and the best part is that you won’t have to do it alone…”
“I-I won’t?”
>Luna nods as she joins the hug “Of course not, we will be right behind you, cheering for you, giving you advice and lending you a hoof if you ever lose your way….that’s what a mother does after all”
>The three of you spend all night chatting, laughing and playing on that garden of dreams and fantasy, but not that you cared, your moms didn’t care, that’s for sure…that is, until a couple of guards came in and told Celestia that she was one hour late to raise the sun…
>After you saw the little spectacle of watching Luna lowering the moon and Celestia raising the sun, the three of you took the day free…to rest… so the three of you head to…Luna’s room, where the three of you decide to sleep in the same bed…
>Awww yeah! You were getting those nice cuddles, this was a guaranteed awesome slumber!
> Your moms were out like a candle the moment they hit the sack… but so much had happened in the past few days that you couldn’t get any sleep…
>you decide that it would be better to contemplate things…for a little while, then you would enjoy your motherly snuggles.
>Because in the last few days you have travelled back and forth between dimensions, earned your cutie mark while avoiding being brain-washed and blasted to the death by a psycho unicorn with a bad haircut and met your lifelong friend now transformed into a sexy, teenaged draconequus with god like powers that she can’t control…just like with Tequila…
>And regarding inter-dimensional travel, there was the concern over that alternate Anon…if you could even call him that. Who was he? Why did he come to your dimension?

>>28932889
>Discord said that you shouldn’t worry about it, and he convinced Cherrywood to not get concerned about that guy and leave that matter to the side…and you trusted in Discord…despite everything that has happened…you still trusted him…but still
>Why did he want to pass as a changeling? Did he want to stir some trouble in your dimension? Did he want to cause an inter-dimensional trouble? Did he want said trouble to escalate to a full-fledged war?
>But for what purpose? No…let’s back track…you are already thinking way ahead, like way, waaaaay ahead… first of all, let’s piece everything together…that guy is from another dimension, that much is sure…because Discord said so…and you trust Discord.
>Secondly, there was that little changeling passing as a dog…Scrappy. Now, you remember encountering in front of a small treehouse…that was in an apple orchard…Oh…oh dear…he was at Sweetie Belle’s clubhouse!
>Okay…Okay…. Don’t get paranoid…Scrappy wasn’t that bright, in fact he was very, very simple minded, luckily he was also very friendly…heh, you wonder what could that little guy be doing right now? Maybe Sweetie Belle or Applebloom, or Scootaloo has taught him some tricks…
>That would be actually be very cute to see…maybe you could help them, after all, you feel that you got along pretty well with the little fella…hmmm, what if you go there and bring something? Like a nice collar for him or stuff that he and Sweetie Belle’s friends can eat together, like some muffins or nachos, or…Awww dude! You are getting sidetracked!
>Okay, okay! You have to stop planning your little escapade to see your friend and your alternate friends…for now! Yes, for now! Because you were definitely going back there to have some fun with your little changeling-dog-thing friend again!
>So, where were you before you got derailed? Something about Scrappy and nachos…hmmm…Oh, that’s right! The Anon from another dimension! Why did he come here? Wait…you already went over that…dang…

>>28933036
>Oh, yeah! He’s friends with Scrappy! Yeah, okay brain, let’s work! But, wait! You have to backtrack a little more! Because you have been calling him an alternate you…
>And was that really true? So far you are betting that he was a human just on his name alone, there’s not a single pony with that name, because ponies naming system is different from what humans has.
>You can confirm that the colt who visited this dimension and attacked Cherrywood was named Anon too, because that’s what your adorable bat testimony says
>You know that the dimension you visited has someone named Anon there…and yet, you can’t confirm that he was the same Anon who crossed to your own dimension, or that the guy who attacked Cherrywood was an impostor…
>You just can be sure that this Anon, or Anons came from that particular dimension, again because that’s what Discord said…and you trusted Discord…but let’s assume that there was no fake, and that Anon in fact was in fact the same who attacked Cherrywood.
>Now, you can’t be sure that this Anon is actually an alternate version of you that came from an alternate universe and was selected by an alternate Discord so he…hnnnng…this alternate talk is making your head hurt…
>Let’s just say that this Anon could be from your very own dimension, and he was just a human who got transformed…transformed into what?
>A new question should arise here, is that Anon even a colt? Scrappy never confirmed or denied that, just that he is his friend.
>Cherrywood never said anything about that guy using magic…so he’s not a unicorn … or a draconequus, or something else… He’s something without magic, so if he’s a pony then he must be either a Pegasus or an earth pony
>And she also said that he was a colt…an earth pony colt…right…you forgot about that. BUT nothing rules out that he could’ve just shape-shifted! HAH HAH! Take that, logic!

>>28933041
>Is that Anon even a pony though?! The transformation process works at random after all. He might be a human for all you know, and if you were right about how changelings work, he might very well be one of them…
>But there’s also the fact that Scrappy heavily implied that this other Anon as you now will call him, also knows personally or is possibly a friend of the changeling Queen,…
>And he did something to the changeling Queen that made Scrappy wanting to destroy that Anon, plus the whole not using magic against Cherrywood, thus not havng magic thing might put a hamper on the hypothesis about that Anon being a changeling
>How would that Queen even look like? Oh man, it would be totally awesome if she was like the Queen in Aliens, and she had like this double set of jaws and…AAAARGH! YOU ARE GETTING DERRAILED AGAIN! Bad brain! BAD!
>Okay, so this guy might be friends with the changeling Queen, if that’s the case, then why would he even want to frame here? Hmmm…what if he was scouting other dimensions so the changelings could invade them?
>Hmmm…then again…Scrappy wanted to destroy him, even with his cuteness and lack of…critical thinking, that would put a big hole in that hypothesis, and of course the other thing was
>Can the changelings even do that? Because that’s another big question, how did that Anon even got here? You assumed that it was by Discord’s hand…err, paw…no wait…
>Discord uses his talons to cast magic, so it would be by Discord’s talons, aaaaaand you are getting derailed once more…dang!
>Okay…How did that Anon crossed over to your dimension? Okay…one possibility are that the changelings can do that…and you don’t know how likely that is because you don’t even know how a changeling looks like!
>You already established that he can’t use magic…maybe…most surely…probably…so the only means that he could achieved such feat are external to him.

>>28933050
>He couldn’t have used human tech because inter-dimensional travel is just theoretical, and the only way that humans has to even start to conduct “small-sized” experiments on that matter was the pride and joy of the AOSR: The anti-matter reactor
>Cheesy name…and it doesn’t actually does what the name says…don’t get derailed! That reactor must be powered by a frickin’ fusion reactor, and it can just sent, in theory, small sized objects to other dimensions by using…
>Whatever, you are boring yourself…point is, it can’t handle things bigger than a pebble, every object must be highly radioactive, you need the power of a whole state to power the thing aaaand…it comes with the miniscule risk of maybe, juuuuust maybe, burning the entire atmosphere in like two hours.
>So, the only option left, and the one that you know for sure that it can travel across dimensions is…chaos magic. So you can’t leave this alternate….you know what? Let’s scrap the alternate word! You can’t rule out that his Discord had something to do with this!
>But Cherrywood said that he was basically the poor man’s version of yourself…but Discord can shape-shift, right? But why would that Discord struggle so much against your bat if he’s all powerful and his ego knows no limit?
>So again, this was Anon…or a fake…ARGH! Remember that you ruled out the fake because you didn’t want to get a headache!
>Right! This Anon somehow… probably… got the aid of his Discord so he could travel to your dimension but his Discord must surely didn’t come with him
>Which puts another mark into the “framing the changelings” hypothesis: What could that Discord gain with this? He could just go like I’m the spirit of chaos, baby! And transform them into ice-cream or trap them inside his house, or make them a bunch of chairs or something…

>>28933057
>What if that Anon just crossed a portal that Discord made for fun, got curious and everything was just a big misunderstanding?
>T-That would mean that Anon is…not that smart if he just jumped like that…after all, you did it after being sure that Discord had your back, and you equipped yourself with a taser gun and a pair of magically enhanced thermal googles…
>That outcome would be kind of a letdown to be honest…all this rambling for a dude who could very well just be a simpleton…
>But if he isn’t…well, that means that he probably manipulated his Discord…to…to…
“*Yawwn*”
>Okay…now you were tired…and kinda bored…whatever, it’s not like you can get all the answers right now, and
“*Yawwwwn*”
>Okay…time to sleep…that Anon is a jerk, case closed…you will just have to…think…how to meet…Scrappy…again…
>Things go dark as you fall sleep completely…you can’t remember much…only that you dreamed about you, and your moms, and Cherrywood, and Aegia, and Moonlight, and Moon Dancer, and Eris, and all of your friends having an adventure related to knights and dragons….


Alright, now this is it! Chaos carnival is done and over! Next update we will be moving on with other aspects of PhD's new life!

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>>28931801
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>>28932243
It's hard being a cookies these days I suppose.

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>>28933036
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>>28933066
Jesus fucking Christ PhD's mind is gone. I'm by no means a Doctor and not even when I was a kid was I that scatterbrained.

>>28933069
I SAID, I SAID, I WOULD PUT A COCK IN THAT FISH.

CHICKEN THAT IS.

IT'S A JOKE SON, DON'T YOU GET IT?

>>28933348
Yeah, but he still came with actual accurate conclusions about erfanon, his ties to Chrysalis, Discord and how erfanon might be, its just that I dunno, his serious and methodological way of thinking has finally fallen to the childification. PhD ADULT mind is now completely gone, now we have an incredibly intelligent colt

>>28933439
Sorry, okay so we have this immensely intelligent colt with past life experiences of an adult, his more serious personality has been replaced by this smug yet kind and loving kid who likes to speak fancy, before it was because PhD was more serious, mature and educated, and while he's still educated, I get the feeling that this is now more of a quirk than hints of this high profile scientist.

His straight forward and objective way of thinking was struck down thanks to child (and pony)fication, dunno how your Anon will turn out Gummy( I'll do these essays about him too) but PhD got hit by those two factors in the hardest way.

Still, his intelligence shines, being able to track down basically everything about ErfAnon, yes his mind process is now child-like but his brain is still powerful like no other, I'm excited to see where this goes next

>>28933066
Great update!

>>28934007
I agree

>>28908265
>Greentext about Eris fuck little colt anon.

>>28929421
>You look back to Chrysalis as Filthy disappears from earshot, and sigh. She really did it this time...
"Chrysalis..thank you. Really, thank you for this"
>Chrysalis doesn't answer at first. She just walks over to the door and waits, then looks back at you. She looked like she had confidence on you. But still, she says nothing, and just opens the door. Hmmm...she just didn't want to return your thanks.
>Now was the time. Both you and Chrysalis head back into the room where Diamond Tiara awaited you.
>She looked into your eyes frowning, she was very very worried. "A-anon, are you ok? Is something wrong?...i-it's not me...is it?"
>You don't know what got into you. Or perhaps, the poison's effect made you feel brave and wanting to please your love. You walk up to her, smooth and suave, a smile on your face as you gently grab her hoof and pull her a little closer.
"No need to worry my love, I was merely making sure of a couple of things before our big dance....Silver Spoon, if you please."
>Silver Spoon got surprised at first. She didn't expect you to be the one to tell her anything. But she did as you asked, as Diamond Tiara just looked absolutely stunned by your approach.
>The music starts up, you could remember every step as if you had done it one hundred times before. You were confident. You looked deep into DT's eyes, and pulled her just a little closer. causing her to blush big.
"Are you ready? My sugardoodle?"
>She just nodded. You couldn't be sure if she was actually ready. But...it didn't matter as you nearly automatically began to step to the music. leading Diamond Tiara along

>>28934569
>With every step, Diamond Tiara had to move closer to you to just manage to stay in step. You were leading her along like an expert.
>Your turn was with a quick step and a bounce as you lead her forward, slightly revolving with every step to the music from the phonograph. It was a heavenly tune that guided you and her along with every step.
>When the dance became a slower two step. You brought Diamond Tiara close enough to whisper in her ear during the waltz.
"Diamond Tiara, my love, your eyes are more beautiful than any star found in the sky. More lovely than any gem. When I gaze upon them, I never want to look away. You're the only one I could ever love"
>"..A-anon...d-do you really mean that? There's so many mares and fillies you could have. You even could have had Applebloom, a sister of a real element of harmony..but you chose me..." Tears start to slowly appear in her eyes "..Sometimes I get scared, that it was never meant to last....that things might change and- mpph?!"
>You just do it, you kiss her with a peck on the lips. Well, a little more of a peck. It stops her words as you give her a warm and loving smile.
"Shhhh, don't think like that. Nothing is going to happen. I don't care if Applebloom was a princess. She's not you, she's not MY princess."
>You were about to give her a spin. But she pushes forward. Hugging you close and forcing you and herself upright on hind legs. She doesn't let you go as she says in a low and dreamy voice "A-anon.....I love you..."
>You whisper back those words. Poison or not, you felt like you really did.
>You continue the dance with improvisation , keeping your balance and holding Diamond Tiara close as you now dance while standing upright You didn't want to fail, you wanted her to have the most romantic dance in her life. The poison didn't matter. This moment here...it was legendary.

>>28934608
>When the music finally ended, you gently release her and go back on your four legs. You both now just stood there gazing upon eachother before Diamond Tiara nuzzles under your chin. Ecstatic about the dance. "Anon...that was the most romantic dance I've ever had. It was so much better than anything on our date..I feel...I feel..." She didn't know how to feel. She just went silent and continued to nuzzle.
"I'm glad you enjoyed yourself my princess"
>You let out a soft yawn..the gumbo was definitely losing it's effect now. You were getting tired. But you forced yourself to stay awake...for her.
"I wanted to make sure my dance was perfect. That's why I stepped out, I just wanted to practice it up just a little. For you, less than perfection just wouldn't cut it."
>Her nuzzling was warm. She didn't say any words. She just continued to cuddle,nuzzle, and never wanting to leave your side.
>And of course, you nuzzle right back.
>Silver Spoon was just enamored by it all. She stepped next to Chrysalis and just pointed at the both of you. "Isn't that the most romantic thing you ever seen?"
>Chrysalis fakes a smile as she gazes upon the both of you "Yes, it fills me with joy just to see those two so happy"
>It filled her belly too. However, there also a feeling she wasn't expecting. She felt...happy for you. in a way. She actually had to step back and internally think on this. She didn't realize she even truly had this much of a care on this.She didn't like it. She also knew she couldn't let you both nuzzle like that for too long. So it was the perfect excuse to get in the middle of this while avoiding her pesky feelings,
>"Your highness's, it does my heart good to see you both so happy. But..."
>Chrysalis fakes a yawn. Which, also causes Silver Spoon to yawn. "But it is getting a tad late. Perhaps we should retire?"

>>28934653
>Diamond Tiara actually agrees as she looks into your eyes with a love drunk smile "Ok...Anon, will you snuggle with me tonight?"
>HOT DAMN. WILL YOU!
"Of cou-"
>But Chrysalis cuts you off. Here, she was just making sure you didn't fuck up. Things would get very bad if she let it get that far. "Actually, as his sister. I can't let him do that. I'm sorry Diamond Tiara, but it's better if he just sleeps in the bed set up for him"
>But Diamond Tiara wouldn't have any of that. She finally starts getting a little bothered and flustered that she couldn't have you in her bed. She looks at Chrysalis with an annoyed look and whiny voice. "Whhhhy! He's my prince! Princesses and Princes always cuddle in the same bed right? It's like being married!"
>And that was exactly the problem. You started to slowly snap out of your own love stupor for just long enough to realize that Chrysalis was right. You'd probably start gently fucking her if that happened...but ugghhh...you wanted to soooooo bad.
"A-actually my lovely sugar dumpling. Sis m-might be right."
>"What?!" Now Diamond was hurt as she stepped up to you with sad eyes, making you step back from her approach "Why? WHYWHYWHYWHY!"
>"W-woah...umm..Diamond, don't you think you're taking this too far? This was a great sleepover and all, but I think the reason your dad didn't let you have one with just anon was because of stuff like that. I know my dad said once that that kind of stuff is for adult couples. I dunno why, but maybe we should listen to Nymous" Silver Spoon suggested, upset at her friend's reaction. She was so put off though. She didn't understand why she was acting so weird.
>"No! I don't care!" Diamond was now angry, stomping her hoof "Why are you all suddenly so against us? Can't you see how much we love eachother! Tell them Anon! Tell them!"

>>28934735
>...ahh shit. You wanted to do what she said. But the one thing that scared you nearly as much was Chrysalis's dark stare as she slowly rubbed her hoof across her neck. Signifying death, Yeah, Chrysalis meant business. She didn't want everything to fall apart and ruin her reputation. She needed the ponies trust. Adults moreso than kids. She needed you to do what's right....
>...and it was so hard to do so looking back at Diamond's anger. She wanted you just...so badly.
>You had to break and resist every urge the poison and your love was causing in you to do the right thing. And the only way to do that? Think of a way to change the flow instead of stopping it...god you hoped this worked...because if it didn't. you'd be porking her, you just knew it.
"My love, they are right. But please..."
>You step up to her and hold her hoof
"Do not think of this as a negative. There is obviously a reason we cannot share a bed this night. It must only mean that when our relationship goes further. We'll have our own bed to cuddle and snuggle onto, and with eachother every night...no..any time we wish. Patience my dear. It will only make that night so much sweeter."
>God, you sounded so...cliche and Casanova-like. But you've seen it work so many times in cartoons. It had to work here...it just had to.
>"mmnn....but..." Diamond Tiara didn't know what to think of it at first. She wanted to do it now. But everything she was being told seemed like a bad idea..but she nearly didn't care. If not hearing that in the future, they could do it whenever, she'd just whine some more. So she just looked at you, with a hopeful and serious face. "Do you promise?"
>You nod
"On my honor as your coltfriend"
>"...." Diamond Tiara sighed, and then let out a cute and accidental yawn. "...ok...ok.." She goes and nuzzle with you one more time. "I guess we can all go to bed then, Anon, I ove you so so so so much. You love me too, right?"
"With all my heart"

>>28934783
>She then gazes upon your eyes one last time "You're so sweet Anon, I'll dream about you tonight..." She actually plants a gentle sweet kiss on your lips, giggles, and looks into your eyes dreamily "In our future castle, laying next to you as we watch our children play" Then she titters a little more with one more nuzzle "Once I learn where babies come from, we're gonna have a lot of them! lots of princesses and princes."
>...ok...OK..even with the poison. That was a little much. You didn't want to have THAT many children...and oh god. "When she learned". Her appetite would be insatiable. Your body would break no matter how willing the spirit would be.
"Y-yeah...mnn..."
>But the thought vanishes quickly as you plant a gentle kiss on her lips as well. making her smile.
"And I shall dream of us as well, in our castle, as I fight off many would be villains who wish to kidnap you"
>She blushes and hides her face a little, turning to the side "O-oh...A-anon, you're so romantic. even in your dreams"
>You give her a smug chuckle.
"I know....goodnight, my princess."
>"G-goodnight..my prince..." Diamond Tiara sighs lovingly and looks to Silver Spoon and Chrysalis "Goodnight everypony. I hope you enjoyed this very royal sleepover"
>"I did, it was sooooo totally like those romance books! And you know what that means, right?" Silver Spoon says to Diamond Tiara, intending to fill her with excitement.

>>28934818
>Diamond Tiara shakes from the anticipation of the future as she grins uncontrollably "I knnnooww! Marriage! I just can't wait!" She hops up on her bed and cuddles with her pillow. "That's why I want to sleep right now anyway. Sleeping makes time go faster! which makes the wedding day sooner! Ohhhh!"
>Those two were just so eager to see you get married. It was really endearing actually.
>Chrysalis didn't have much more to say.Chrysalis got up to ask and take both yours,Silver Spoon, and Diamond Tiara's clothes to put away...a steamy sight for you to be sure. She then went and shut off the lights. and bid everyone a pleasant sleep. And that she was "proud" to be Diamond Tiara's "maid". Something Diamond Tiara took with pride.
>As for you? If the poison was temporary, you'd just have to ride it out until morning...but fuck. You could feel it. You were going to dream of so many lewd things.You knew if you still had any connection to your old world. That some bored slob would probably write some sort of something called "Greentext" about it.

And....thus begins Season 6

>>28934820
Hah, he dodged a bullet there. Nice deflection.

Also

>You were going to dream of so many lewd things.You knew if you still had any connection to your old world. That some bored slob would probably write some sort of something called "Greentext" about it.

Kek

>>28934818
so this is it for the sleepover huh?

>>28934735
And that's how DT almost stopped being pure

This was nice

>>28935075
No they haven't fugged yet

>>28933066
Anon seems a little schizophrenic.

>>28934608
HHHNGGGG

>>28934818
>"Once I learn where babies come from, we're gonna have a lot of them! lots of princesses and princes."
wew

>...ok...OK..even with the poison. That was a little much. You didn't want to have THAT many children
what a faggot

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>Diamond Tiara doesn't sleep; she sneaks into Anon's bed for a quick cuddle before sleeping
>Anon gets surprised by DT's hooves around his chest and quickly notices she's in there with him; both sharing the same bed and under the blanket, unnoticeable for Chrysalis and/or Silver Spoon
>But mostly for Chrysalis
>Diamond Tiara whispers how she's so awfully sorry that she couldn't resist until the future, but that a little quick tiny cuddle of 5 minutes wouldn’t do damage to their relationship
>Anon thought for a moment that this was a wet dream. Like, why not? He didn’t have just a single dream; he had dreams about fucking pillows and what not
>So Anon turns slightly around and plants a kiss in Diamond Tiara’s lips, one that would last a whole minute. One filled with so many lust and love that is surprisingly weird how Chrysalis wouldn’t wake up
>Yet again, Chrysalis would think Anon and Diamond Tiara are having dreams and still feeling the embrace of each other in their dreams
>What she didn’t know is that Anon was about to fuck up the whole sleepover
>Actually, yeah, fuck up would be a good way to call it
>Anon wanted to tenderly fuck DT, right?
>DT wanted princesses and princes, right?
>It takes only a hoof for Anon to move into Diamond Tiara’s hips and start the next waltz
>They break the kiss; a slight but visible trail of saliva could be seen between them. For Diamond Tiara, this experience was new. For Anon? The little fucker still thought this was a dream; he couldn’t even remember the last time he kissed this good in a “dream”
>Diamond Tiara whimpers and says in a low tone something cheesy to Anon, but she’s stopped as Anon goes for another kiss, full tongue and what not as his hind hoof started to move near Diamond Tiara’s tail


Nothing more to say, I loved the update, Erf!

>>28936243
Don't stop

Lewd buma

I feel like we need a crossover between Alberto and cockfish anon

How long until erfanon cucks DT?

Goddamn you stupid cunts, where are you?

>>28937795
Won't happen. Erf is too nice and pure.

Happy Thanksgiving for those that celebrate!
Hail Celestia!

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>>28938256
God save the Princess

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>>28937795
>How long until erfanon *dicks DT?

Fixed it for you.

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>>28938256
Happy Thanksgiving bud!

Here's a picture of a turkey to celebrate!

>>28933348
That's because thanks to my work, I applied some real world science to this, high IQ kids have several thought processes going along a main one, usually supportive but sometimes derivitaive of this main idea.

I just didn't want to go full on this (Because that would require me to go full James Joyce with this shit), opting to have a more scatterbrained but yet highly intelligent (and effective in deducing what ErfAnon might be and what he could not be) little guy, he's a kid now afterall, and kids are sometimes in the clouds.

Woops! This >>28938820
was also meant for you, >>28935598 kind anon. As this guy explained>>28933494.

His intelligence, effectiveness, smugness and quick thinking are all there, he just has now the child aspect of being a little more...distracted. After all this is the first time that we have seen PhD having a moment to think in a long time (I think that it was since he first correlated the stained glasses with the religion of this new world for him) he was much more serious, brash and mean at the begining ofbthe story, but that has been something that PhD has been gradually losing over time. Again, don't worry, he's not an idiot now, and he still has all the experience of his past life as a human (social savy as sunsetfag put it before)

So, PhD lost?

bump for something to read soon (please writefriends)

>>28938899
Yeah, it's just...
He's kind of -really- scatterbrained, isn't he?
Just a bit?
Just a smidge overdone?
It comes off kind of ominous, like his mind is going to degrade further.

Other than that, good update, I liked the scene in the garden.

>>28940417
>Lose his mind even further
This is as far as childification goes

>>28940230
I'll try to get something out for today, no promises but I'll try, after all PhD's natural enemy the chad is something that is about to happen

ded thred

>>28940532
That's certainly good to hear, but I meant that the update gave that impression.

>>28940979
That's certainly bad to hear, but it is a holiday weekend.

>>28941380
ded writer

>>28941427
O no

>>28940417
>Just a smidge overdone?
Nah nigga I like child PhD he reminds me of my lil bro. 4/10 update for you GummyBear Update when and Anon PhD Trump when

>>28908265
I'm looking for a certain Eris pic, /coc/... She looks bored, her body is kinda twisted and a claw/talon is lies on her muzzle.
I searched through the Booru already, but simply can't find it.

Bum

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>>28941824
Is this one the pic you are looking for?

Is the sunsetfag ded?

So folks, gonna start writting

>>28943828
yay more phd

We all just need to take a second and thank these glorious fellows for taking the time out of their day to write for us.
Thank you, writefags. I know I wouldn't have the strength to keep a story going knowing that only about 50 people will ever read it. Takes some special kind of love for writing and for the community that I just don't have and can't comprehend. Thank you all.

Especially you, Erf, been following since the beginning and I'm so happy you've made it this far. The first thing I do every morning is read the update to your story

Love you guys.

>>28941449
O yes

>>28944086
i need a crying pic in jpg format stat

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>>28944264
I'll give you a png and that's my final offer.

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>>28944264

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>>28944086
>>28944264
I've been reading your story ever since the beginning as well.

Keep on keeping on, erf, you indomitable cunt.

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>>28944264
Shit not jpeg don't hate me!

>>28944086
Also hear hear!
I love you guys!
Everyone's work is super appreciated!
It's glorious!

I'm sorry my friends, I don't think that I will be updating tonight

I'm updating tomorrow as soon as I wake up.

>>28934820
>The night passes to day.
>You may be unaware, but you cuddle on your pillow tightly. as if it was your very marefriend. Drool soaked into it's comfy body.
>Even as the sun shines through the windows, you stay asleep.
>That is..until you hear some voices as the bedroom door opens.
>"He's still asleep, is he? I'm surprised nopony woke him" Says one voice...very familiar...Discord?
>"Well, my little darling insisted he get as much sleep as he could get. I wasn't about to say no since it wouldn't be any trouble. But, I also didn't know he'd sleep for that long. His sister even left, insisting on the same thing. Is he usually a heavy sleeper?" Another voice, yeah..that was Filthy Rich.
>"Verily, but I'm sure he'll grow out of that phase soon enough. Besides, it's not so bad. It always means I'll know where to find him on times like these." Discord says, but you were just waking up and still cuddling onto your pillow. So you didn't care to see what he might be doing.
>"I'd hope so. It's been a while and there's important things to be done. Well, I'd assume there would be. Then again, I don't know much of the business of a draconeequs. Speaking of which, I'd like to thank you for finally signing off on my project for Los Pegasus" Filthy Rich said. That actually made one of your ears perk up....you remembered that. Filthy Rich was trying for a very very long time trying to get Discord to sign off on..something.

erf time bbys

>>28945410
>"Oh not at all Mr.Rich. I should be thanking you instead. I had no idea the opening proceeds for the "chaos coaster" would go to animal shelters around Equestria. I am sorry it took me all this time to agree to it, but I never really believed in chaos being a corporate matter. But, it does sound better than a "Princess" coaster or whatever nonsense you were going to try next with Princess Celestia. Now, let me ask. You did say that there would be a statue erected of myself since I'll be making the biggest donation AND a personal letter will be sent to Fluttershy and Princess Twilight Sparkle on my good deed, right?" Discord was sounding pretty smug about this
>"Well, yes, of course. It was in the contract aft-"
>But Filthy Rich gets cut off as you are suddenly lifted in the air, making you yelp in surprise.
>"Yes yes, good whatever. I must be going now, no time to talk." Discord says in a hurry
>"B-but Mr.Discord, there's still a few things I'd like to talk about. And my daughter was asking for Anon to join her and I for some lunch and if you could, I'd like you to j-" But nothing more could be said as you and Discord disappear in a flash.
>Filthy Rich just stood there, stunned at how quick that went. "...Now what do I tell her...hrnnn"
>Meanwhile, you plop onto your bed, bouncing a little as Discord appears in front of your mirror, adjusting a Hawaiian shirt and sunglasses. "Oversleeping again Anon? On our special day? You're lucky i'm in such a good mood right now or I'd have traded you in for that captain changeling, he seems eager to please"
>You roll onto your back as your mind starts to wake up from the grogginess.
"What happened?..A-am I back home?"

>>28945461
>Discord let's out an annoyed "Yes..." As he snaps his talons. making you don a blue Hawaiian shirt. the back saying "I LOVE THE CRYSTAL EMPIRE". Discord then props you up to a standing position with his own paw and talons as you wobble a little from your tiredness.
""Huh..W-what's going on exactly?"
>"Our plan? Our plan to do nothing but enjoy the Crystal Empire while the princesses squirm in agony thinking we might try to wreak havoc on the kingdom. That plan." Discord starts scratching at his teeth, making sure it's nice and shiny.
>Oh...OH SHIT, THAT'S TODAY?!
>And then you put your hoof to your chest. You didn't feel the effects of the poison anymore...but..those feelings.
"T-that's today? H-hold on Discord. I'm still getting over last night. I was hit with love poison and...woo. That shit is strong...what even happened to Chrysalis? What did Diamond Tiara have to say whens he woke up? I'm..still a little confused here"
>"Anon.." Discord grips his talons. he was ACTUALLY trying to be patient with you. But he was eager..or perhaps late..for what he had to do.
>He then turns with a smile as he gently pats you on the head. "Chryssie tried to sneak off somewhere, but she was easy to put on lockdown for the day despite her silly complaints. As for your little marefriend, she seemed to just want to let you sleep and "Dream of the future"..I assume she meant with you being married or some rubbish like that. But, that does explain her attitude when I spoke to her. She kept telling me she'd make a great "Stepdaughter". Discord shivered "It was unnerving, as for you my dear Anon. I need you to wake up, we're short on time and the princess's train will be arriving at the city soon. So...let me see your "DO NOTHING" face"

>>28945766
>Discord stares intently at you as you yawn and rub your eyes. Then he grins "Perfect! I couldn't agree more that the empire can be boring, but do be a little chipper about it and we should do fine." Discord rubs his brow as he sighs in relief "And here I thought we'd have a problem"
>Ok...then.
"Discord, seriously. I'm just a little jarred. I was over there and now I'm over here. Can I get a second? A lot happened last night. I just need some time to unwind. I need to speak to Diamond Tiara"
>The poison's effect. even while worn off. was circulating through your system by ways of memories. Chrysalis was right, it did it's job. You felt like you at least had to say "Good morning"
>"No can do Anon, you already said you'd do this with me and we are running out of time." Discord turned away from you, and looked out the window into the abyss, his voice growing softer as he thought of the plan ahead "Anon, you're my pal. My little chaos buddy. And although I have not spawned you, I like to think of you as a little piece of myself. You said you were alright with this. You had all this time and you chose to sleep through it. Is it not fair to me to just leave me to go do the things you speak of?" He turns to you, you couldn't tell if he was faking it, but he had tears in his eyes "Would you leave me to torment Twilight on my own? This won't work without you. You know that"
>And now..you could feel guilt ride up on you. He was your friend. And he had wanted to do this for a long while. You said you would. You gave him your word. But fucking dammit. Diamond...
>And then there was Chrysalis....well, she was on lockdown. It should be ok.
>You give up. Hell, who knows. Maybe you needed this. Maybe one upping the princesses could be fun and get your mind off Diamond Tiara. Thinking the way you are now due to the poison's lingering effects, should it have any, could be dangerous.

>>28945813
"Alright, ok. Ooook...I got it. You're right. You've been looking forward to this and it would be pretty unfair for me to take it away from you. So, what's the plan. What do we do first?"
>Discord's face lights up with glee and he picks you up with his paw. his Paw growing in size to accommodate you as he poops your nose with his talon. "That's the spirit!" He chuckles before slyly snaking towards the portal door, still holding you up. "Yes, well. First we must greet the princesses and make them aware of our presence. That should spook them for sure. And then? We just go and relax somewhere, and fate will do the rest. Simple, no?"
>Yep...simple enough that you felt you couldn't make a mistake.
>You yawn and straighten yourself up. Blinking a few times to adjust your eyes.
"Ok, I got this. I totally got this. But when we're done..I can go see Diamond..right?"
>Discord rolls his eyes and taps your noggin lightly "Head out of the gutter Anon, you can do as you please when we're done but for now I need you to focus on just this. No questions. Just chaos"
"Alright..got it"
>You nodded in determination...until one last thing hit your brain.
"What about Celestia and Luna?"
>As you thought about it. You'd think that they might try to personally question you on what you might be up to.
"Don't you think they'll try to get me to tell them why we're really there or something?"
>Discord shrugs "I'm not too worried about that Anon. I mean, not unless I'd have to suddenly be worried about finding you swimming with the fishes in my aquarium."
>That makes you tense, super tense. but only a moment until you realize he'd never do it. Not at this point.
"Yeah yeah, whatever. You don't need to try to scare me you know I'm down with this"

>>28945858
>Discord chuckles at that "I know I don't have to. But you also act as if I wouldn't do it either. I can make it where you can breath underwater. That's the easy part. The hard part would be trying not to lose my gut as you try to swim away from the sharks. I may not be able to pull you out in time if I'm too busy laughing"
>Ok, that was a little more scary. He was just trying to scare you for shits and giggles obviously. Might as well just go along with it before he actually seriously does something.
"Alright, alright. I get it. Scary stuff, yadda yadda. Didn't you say we were on a time limit or something?"
>"Oh my!" Discord slaps his cheek with his talons "I did, didn't I. Well then, let us make haste!..ooohhh..but before I forget!"
>Discord snaps his talons. making an envelope appear on your dresser. "While I'd actually like to be the one to give these photos to Fluttershy. I thought that maybe, this one time, it'd be nice to let you be the one to brighten her day. Don't tell anypony I said this but. Ahrm" He coughs a little and says in a low voice "But I figure that she'd be happier if you showed her the pictures. And besides..." Discord tries to look a little macho "I don't have time for the excessive amount of affection she'd show if I presented them to her. You know how it is with her. It's too much for somepony like me"
>Well that was bullshit.
>Still, that was awfully nice of him. He was actually letting you be the one to show her the pictures and get those precious cuddles that would sure to follow. He was...giving you that oppurtunity...what a nice guy.
>You thought about asking him about Filthy Rich as well. But. you'd save that for AFTER all this.
"Thanks Discord...Welp, alright. Let's do this. I'm ready..I'm primed"
>You pump your leg like an arm
"I'm pumped!"
>"Excellent!" Discord then puts you down as he changed the door very slightly to appear at the train station. "Then let us go partner, let us go and ruin the princess' day!"

>>28942859
Yes. Thank you.

>>28945908
hrn...i had to go back and watch some of the crystalling again. It seems I need to do a little more planning and make just a few subtle changes for when I actually get to it
so for now. I bid you all adieu

>>28945858
>poops your nose
Yknow I really hope you meant boops or else this just took a really weird turn

>>28908265

>>28946019
We actually took that twist

>>28946019
i meant boop

>>28946019
I don't see why not. The story already went to shit.

I wonder how is this plan going to backfire for the chaos stooges

>>28945908
SOON

Boop

>>28946019
I'm ready to take that turn anon.

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>>28946019
Is Flim and Flam dimension all over again

>You two entered Discord’s tower. The place was beyond your imagination, the sensation of the place was as if you were in some labyrinth mixed with stairs going up and down, it having some doors leading to probably more stairs in random directions
>The place seemed infinite… are the other towers like this? Have these ponies really done this more than one time? Is insane… you would lost your mind if it wasn’t cause you are already insane by signing a contract with the devil
>Aka Discord
>But a job is a job
>And in the meantime you two have done nothing but talk
“So what do you call an owl that does magic tricks?” You ask the filly while holding on a chuckle
>”I don’t know…” She says while waiting on your answer
“HOODINI!”
>You two start sharing some hearty laughs
>”That’s so silly! And funny! Owls go hoo!” She replies with some giggles as you two keep on walking
>Good to see that apparently Houdini was part of this world… somehow. Well, if there was Canterlot city which was parody of Camelot, you aren’t surprised if there is more oddly but similar stuff from Earth
>Both of you have done nothing but talk about puns and jokes at each other for the first fifteen minutes. Sweetie Belle seemed really nervous and you could sense her anxiety as the poor filly was concerned and what not about the place. Aaand because she was really getting near you, like really in your personal space
>She was rather surprised that you would take the tower as nothing but normal or well, impressive
>Maybe it was normal for you… like, you come from another world and you’ve seen some stuff in the past days that… maybe doesn’t surprise you but impress you. Parallel universes, alternative worlds, a creature with god like powers, magical creatures that talk… all you need to see are some freaking dragons
>Your goal in the future is to find a dragon and fucking mount him into the sunset, doesn’t matter the size

>>28948894

>But something inside your pony brain made you wonder and question things
>Like, why do you care about this filly? She’s… just a tiny girl. Like, she could have some 11 years old or 14 years… you two must be near each other age or something. But why? Why do you keep staring at her eyes like if they were made of emeralds? Why do you blush often when she touches you with her marshmallow hoof?
>Your family would be concerned if they knew you were going for a tiny horse…
>Family…
>Your laugh stop slowly as you two keep walking
>Did you have any family?
>Now that you think of… your mind is kinda… kinda… blurry. You don’t remember sometimes stuff from your world and it scares you… the fear of forgetting good moments. You can… barely remember some stuff… you do remember things from Earth but your own memories are… are there… somewhere
>Did you have a mother? Did you have a father? Did you have wife or children? Only thing you remember are some friends… friends…
>As hard as you try to think for a familiar… the first image your mind thinks was... Discord
>”Anon, are you okay?” The hoof of Sweetie Belle interrupts your thoughts but you stay still as you stare on a wall of the tower. She looks at the wall but doesn’t see anything. “Anon! Wake up!”
>The concerned voice of Sweetie Belle brings you back to reality
“….Uh?”
>Your thoughts stop for a moment and you remember that you are in Discord’s tower, alongside Sweetie Belle trying to follow the rest of the group in an attempt to… follow them for… bring them to Discord?
>”You are… crying”
“…”
>You feel it
>Tears, some tears leaving your left eye. Not your right, just your left eye. You bring a hoof to your face and close your eyes for a moment, giving a few sniffs
“Is nothing… I just…”
>You feel the embrace of Sweetie Belle as she gives you a hug
>”Is fine… I know how it feels”
>No you don’t…

>>28948899

>”If anything… if I don’t find my family or you don’t… we can be family, you and me.” She rested her head onto your head. “And the rest of the town too, you have us, Anon. And we have you”
>You were shaking… heavy breathing and confused. Your mind starting to get dizzy and what not
>The job… this is just temporally, right? You are going home after this, right? …you signed a job for money… or powers… but you have your doubts now
>Tsk. Where did you bravery go? Where was that human that accepted that contract and made himself proud of being Discord’s son?
>You are getting soft, Alberto…
“ASHDASJ AH!”
>You ears perk up. You quickly look around as you leave Sweetie Belle hug
>Those… weren’t your thoughts. But you could hear them as in your voice
>You take a deep breath and then try to calm yourself
“We need to keep walking. I just… have a bad feeling, that’s all”
>You were starting to get more worried. Discord expected from you something, and all you are doing is making friends… well, you /did/ bring them in here. Maybe is the wrong tower, maybe is not, but still…
>You did your job
>…Or there is the probability that someone escapes… and there is where you go in. You need to bring them to Discord
>His orders… were clear
>You two keep walking, in random directions since you two didn’t know where exactly the group of Fluttershy and Pinkamena went
>”Maybe we should have waited… what if we get lost? Your teleportation… doesn’t work, or does it work now?”
>You shrug. The damn thoughts in your head wouldn’t let you think straight
>You just wanted to finish this puta mission. But then… what next?
>What will Discord do to Sweetie Belle? Or the rest of the group?
>…What does he do for starters? You never knew and they never told you exactly… just that they were like, gone or something
>You need to see it from your very own eyes

>>28948894
Kill yourself

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>>28948894
>>28948899
>>28948908

>>28948908

>You two get to another door as you two were walking downstairs. Why downstairs and not upstairs since it was a tower? The logic in your mind told you that Discord stuff works different, like first of all, it doesn’t apply logic. So up is down and down is up. Probably. Maybe. Hopefully
>Sweetie Belle decides to open the door with her magic and in the other side of the door was…
>A room that… looked like that of a maternity room. It had several baby beds from pink to blue, every bed was empty but, something in the room… seemed odd
>Like… why this room? Was it random or was it for some reason?
>”Something tells me that this room is no good, Anon…” Even Sweetie Belle felt the negativity on the room
“Just stay at my side. I said I was… gonna protect you, didn’t I?” You shyly say but mostly, it was for her to make sure she wouldn’t get nervous
>It slightly works, but she doesn’t comment on it
>You two walk from the several baby beds that suddenly feel like thousands, as if it was eternal… or maybe is just your imagination cause you’ve been walking for a while in the stairs labyrinth
>Then you two hear it. You two hear baby crying somewhere in this maternity room
>Now you don’t want to say it, but is scary as fuck the feeling you got in the moment you hear the crying
>You two look at each other with concern, Sweetie Belle decides to stay close to you for some moments as you two walk to a door in the distance that was probably an exit but the entrance to another crazy room Discord had planned
>The crying intensifies, meaning that you two are near whatever is making the cries
>Then you two see it… a pony from the group, holding…
>”My sweetheart… I’ve never thought I was going to be a father… I’m so sorry for leaving you… I’m never leaving you again… I have you three now… we have each other…”
>You wanted an example… and you got one

>>28949022

>”Mr. Cake?” Sweetie Belle said to the pony that was holding with his hooves, as if they were babies… two pumpkins. The two pumpkins had happy and sad expressions, similar to the ones in the theater
>So that was his name… you do remember something from… when you were at the kitchen ruining the weapons of the town. This pony mentioning his wife…
>So Discord does this? Trick ponies and break them mentally? That’s… so cruel. You really want to do this? Become the next Adolf Hitler and ruin everyone’s lifes…?
>You’ll think about it later…
>Sweetie Belle wanted so hard to make him enter in reality but you noticed something that she maybe didn’t
>Mr. Cake had some gray colors… not entirely to be like a black and white cartoon, but you could see it…
>Placing a hoof on her shoulder, you look to Sweetie Belle and shake your head while showing a serious expression to her
“Is too late for him… I don’t think you can help him”
>You still needed that group to be near Discord. Te pese o no… you still had a mission in your hands. Well, hooves…
“Maybe if we defeat Discord we’ll get him back to normal. If we do, everything will go back to normal… so please Sweetie… leave him be”
>Sweetie Belle looked away from you for a moment, and then she sighed. She realized she nor you could help him, you two were kids after all
>”Right…”
>You take her hoof and slowly back away from the now crazy pony that was talking to two pumpkins on his hooves.
>Well… that’s one less in the group
>”Daddy is here now… please don’t cry… hush now… quiet now… is time to go to bed…”
>…Fucking hell
>You two continue into the next room, this room was… another maze. A maze of mirrors
>Well, now this was creative and less spooky than the others fucking rooms. You don’t know how many floors this tower has, but maybe Discord is playing with each pony from the group as he tries to get into their minds to break them

>>28949028

>That poor pony did suffer, you guess
>But you didn’t care… you didn’t know him… so is not your problem
>You take a step forward into the maze of mirrors and Sweetie Belle follows you behind
>And first thing you do is hit yourself with a fucking mirror in your face
“Ah! Me llev-“ Control the Spanish, Alberto…
>Sweetie Belle comes close to check on you despite it being just an accidental hit. It didn’t hurt /that/ much anyway… but ugh, you really hated these kinds of mazes
>Heh… funny how you can’t remember stuff from Earth yet you remember being in one of these things
>”Anon?” She says looking around, maybe to a nearby mirror
“Yes, Sweetie?”
>”Did I say how bad decision was entering the tower already?”
“…Like, 4 times. Why?”
>”Make it 5…”
>Okay, okay. The way to search the other fucking ponies in a tower that… is a maze and does random stuff is… well, maybe there is no way to get to the other ponies of the group
>So far you have find only one, and that is far by insane now
“Don’t worry, we’ll find the other ponies in no ti- OGH!” You crash into other mirror. “WAAAH! I’m already tired of these mirrors!”
>You look back at Sweetie Belle and take a sit… you really were starting to get frustrated. Curse Discord for making a floor like this
>”A-A-Anon?”
>Damnit, now what?
“Si señorita escalofrios?” You don’t even care if she doesn’t understand you. You are tired of how scared she can get
>Like… these are only mirrors. What’s the worst that can happen here? You breaking one and getting bad luck?
>”The reflection of yourself in the mirror… didn’t sit like you did…”
>…
>You start laughing a bit
“Jajaja! Nice one! Trying to scare me so you aren’t the only one afraid here? Good one”
>”No I’m telling the-“
>You stand up and look behind you with a smirk. In front of you were probably a mirror and other three reflections of you