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Fallout Equestria: Outcasts (CYOA)

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Welcome to this new CYOA! What is it about? It's Fallout Equestria! I'm actually quite excited to write this; even though it might suck. Let's just see where it goes, and hope it goes well!
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Alright, time for character creation!

Where were you born?

A stable (choose the Stable number)

Or

The Wasteland (Can choose a existing settlement or make your own.)
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>>28108591
Stable 164. One of the ones with a REALLY fucked up psychological experiment going on.
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>>28108578
>another fucking foe cyoa

pass
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>>28108591
Wasteland. We grew up in a community that was small, but had a smattering of more advanced technologies we used to protect ourself. It gave us a leg up when it came to learning to use technology, especially considering we grew up in a BAD part of the wasteland (think Texas/midwest).
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>>28108591
>>28108688
Fuck stables, they're overused garbage. Raider camp! Raider camp!
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>>28108578
i don't mind where we're from. I'll pick the wasteland though and we're from the town of hoofard
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>>28108591
If you plan to instantly keep out people who aren't into this subfandom, you might as well use your dedicated general
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>>28108763
Nobody was telling you you can't join us anon.
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>>28108808
>Which (existing) stable
or
>Which "existing" wasteland settlement

Sure, give me the 160 pages-long lore recap and I'm all yours to make a real contribution
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>>28108856
>things that weren't said: The Post
Suggest your own retard. It literally says as much in the post you linked.
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>>28108869

>>28108706
>>28108713
>>28108688
>>28108714
You're right, people totally don't need to know the lore
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>>28108856
He just wants you to give it a number if it's a stable, it doesn't matter if it exists or not they're all pretty much the same.
>or make your own
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>>28108878
Why does that choice matter if they're all the same then?
For the same reason, why should I make my own?
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>>28108856
Foe is largely a copy+paste of Fallout, you could take anything from the game lore, butcher it with a horse pun and hit the nail right on the head.
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>>28108877
>other people know something you don't have to know so this somehow means you have to know it
Alright pal, maybe you should just close the thread if your triggered that much
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>>28108763
I don't plan on that; all are welcome!

>>28108706
>>28108713
>>28108714
You were born in the wasteland; in a small raider camp near the ruins of Detrot; the raider camp was given the unofficial name of Hoofard. The raider camp was established near a Stable: Stable 164. The Stable gave the raiders access to weaponry like Magic Rifles. Due to the Stable, they are considered more dangerous.

The lights blind you as you enter the world for the first time. You start crying as the cold air hits your coat.

Through your crying you hear a commotion.

"I want to see my fucking foal!" A voice shouts, "I didn't spend a fucking hour waiting for my foal to be born, so I couldn't see it!"

"Calm down, Junkrat!" A voice snaps at the other; the voice was raspy, and calm.

The commotion continues for a bit longer; above it all you can hear hoofsteps, getting closer.

You feel a set of dry, and paper-like hooves lift you up.

"Now, let's see what you are." The voice rasps.

Are you male or female? What specie are you?
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>>28108883
>why should I make my own
They're not exactly the same. Number is just for the same reason you'd give a made up settlement a name. It's a name. Why make something up on you own? It's a cyoa what do you think.

>>28108877
Literally all of those places were made up on the spot.
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>>28108892
>Or! Or maybe you should stay in your own containment general then, like this pal of your said then
>>28108644
I wouldn't have said it better

>>28108884
While I don't disagree that fallout is probably a game worth playing, I didn't have that chance. If it was lore related to the mlp show on the mlp board I could understand I guess

>>28108904
And how as a non initiated, am I supposed to tell that it's made on the spot and people are not going to tell me "But anon, that city is cool, why are you against it?" if I disagree?
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>>28108898
colt unicorn
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>>28108898
Female earth pony

>>28108919
>I'm SUPER triggered by this thread b-but you should go!
Nah.
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>>28108919
see
http://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/25360775

This has been done before, no one else, even the uninitiated, whined about anything. How well he can pull it off is reliant upon the OP.
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>>28108972
Anon, please, you won't make me believe that shiting about things you don't like isn't the most common type of post on this website

>>28108969
>I deserve more space than I need because I can
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>>28108996
>m-muh board space
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>>28108919
Okay anon, I see your point. Personally I think you should feel free to go wild and instead of going against a specific idea if you're unsure about it, try and push your support for an idea you like the sound of. So I see your point, but that doesn't mean we won't welcome newbies. Cyoa's aren't serious bussiness.

Plus keeping it in the general would be shit for those uninterested in the cyoa, especially for those who can't keep up. It'd be a lot of bloat and I don't think any of us want to have that situation again. Sunfall got a lot of undeserved shit for that. Us taking one more space isn't a big deal, especially with the shitposting that generally goes on in this board anyway.
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>>28108898
Female batpony with heug hips
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>>28109011
He already admitted that he's whining to whine, not because he actually has a point. There's no need to address him seriously.
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>>28108960
I can't decide if I want this so we care rape with penetration or this >>28108969 so we can get raped by our brothers.

>>28109020
No batshit, but I do approve of hips.
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>>28109011
Alright, I guess that's a decent point for a second thread then

But you won't get the idea that the way this whole thing started was not designed for people who don't know the lore beforehand out of my head. Stables are introduced with no description whatsoever and nothing about the setting is described either.
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>>28108960
>>28108969
>>28109020
Okay, so far it's a tie. I wonder what will break the tie.

Also; this argument I'm seeing here is entertaining but, it needs to stop. I made this CYOA to entertain an audience that doesn't have a lot of CYOAs at the moment and to help with the shortage of them. Frankly, I don't care if you read the story or not; all are welcome.

>>28109011
This anon summarized why this thread is it's own pretty well.

So, I ask: can we please stop arguing. I'm excited to write this and this argument is taking up time for me to write. So, please stop arguing.
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>>28109074
I'll change erf to unicorn then, but I'm still voting mare.
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>>28109085
I'll change bat to unicorn as long as we can have massive hips.
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>>28109074
it would be better to ignore them entirely.
i suggested unicorn colt, i wouldn't mind also voting for an earth mare for that stamina or strength boost we get. so two earth mares.
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>>28109086
We were born with giant hips that ruined our mom's vagina.
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>>28109074
>>28109086
>>28109085
>>28109110
Definitly a Mare, but i'm gonna vote for unicorn
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>>28109074
Colt, earth pony.
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>>28109085
>>28109086
>>28109087
>>28109158
I'm hearing Unicorn mare with large hips. Sorry if I counted the votes wrong.
"Well Junkrat," The voice rasps, "I'm not sure if you were expecting a mare but, it's a filly."

The commotion stops.

"What?"

You hear a set of hooves stomp towards you. A large Earth Pony stallion trots up to you and the pony that's holding you. The large Stallion has a long, and messy mane that's a mix of red and green; with a jungle green coat.

The stallion takes you from the pony's grip; scowling at you as he looks at you.

The scowl then turns into a smile.

"Well, look at you," He smiles, "With a ass like yours, all the colts will be fighting for you. I'm surprised that you didn't break your mom's vagina with your hips!"

"Haha." A feminine voice laughs dryly.

Your father looks away for a second.

"Does anypony have a mirror, or a broken piece of glass?"

"Go get the glass." The raspy voice responds; talking to a different pony in the room.

Your father looks down at you.

"You probably want to see what you look like, huh?"

About a minute later your father is given a dirty piece of glass; which he holds up to you, giving you a look at yourself.

What do you look like?
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>>28109195
We are pure sex. Pouty lips, feminine eyes, thick lashes, the whole shebang. With a deep (but not neon) red coat, and orange hair streak with pink, we turn heads wherever we go.

Our name will be Heartbreaker, and our cutie mark will be a valentine being smashed with a sledgehammer to represent our severe skill at "Distraction" "Motivation" and breaking people's heads open
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>>28109195
blue coat with a little orange hair cotton ball on our head since we're a baby.
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>>28109195

Rather cute for a newborn.
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>>28109195
Can you not double space? It doesn't help anything and makes it slightly more annoying to read.
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>>28109195

A cute filly which would be a funny contrast for the rather nasty looking raiders.
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>>28109221
>>28109223
I'm gonna vote for a blue coat with an orange mane.
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>>28109195

A Zika virus looking baby.
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>>28109239
If we do blue and orange colors I like pretty much everything else as part of this.
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>>28109195
yellow coat and aqua mane.
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What is you name as well? I forgot to add that to the last post.
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>>28109274
Zika
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>>28109274

Cloudy Light. Though the raiders would probably name us Blood Knife or something like that.
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>>28109274
I don't mind Heartbreaker.
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>>28109274
Heartbreaker
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>>28109274
nit pick

harsh mountain (i like this one)

hacksaw
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>>28109274

Burning Rain
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>>28109223
>>28109221
>>28109229
>>28109238
>>28109239
>>28109259
>>28109303
>>28109305
Nobody said anything about the eyes. So, I decided on the eyes.
Staring back at you is a adorable, blue coated, orange maned filly; with large yellow eyes and large hips. On top of your head is a large horn; longer than most unicorn horns.

"You like how you look, don't you?" Your father chuckles.

"C-can I see her?" A feminine voice asks.

Your father turns towards a small mare; who is currently laying on a bed. Her fur and mane are matted with sweat and her eyes were tired looking. Her mane is yellow and her coat is blue; much like yours but, lighter. Your father trots over to her and hands you to her. She pulls you in close and smiles.

"Hey, Heartbreaker." She smiles at you; petting your mane, "Do you like your name? I like it a lot."

You spend a few minutes wrapped in her forehooves with your father standing nearby; smiling.

"Uh, Junkrat, Harsh Mountain," The raspy voice interrupts. Both of your parents look over to the pony. The pony had no fur, only, brown, wrinkly skin.

"I need to take Heartbreaker for a few minutes; make sure everything inside her is... working."

Your mother; Harsh Mountain, reluctantly hands you over to the strange pony.

Your father; Junkrat, trots over to you and the strange pony.

"If you do anything to Heartbreaker, I'll shove your head into your ass."

"Noted." The strange pony replies before trotting away with you.

Time skip?
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>>28109461
Consider we literally have no power to do anything right now, sure.
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>>28109461
>Time skip?

Nah, what is it that this pony trying to test?
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>>28109461
kind of curious what it is he's looking for. heart rate? magic potential?
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>>28109461
>Time skip?

Not just yet.
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>>28109498
>>28109501
>>28109496
The strange pony carries you out of the room and into a hallway. The hallway is a mismatch of old wood and sheet metal. He trots down the hall for a bit before coming to a metal door.

Inside the room is a assortment of counter tops and one table. The counter tops are covered in a variety of medical equipment. He sets you on the metal table; which is covered in small blood stains.

"Alright, let's see here." He mutters; trotting over to one of the counter tops.

He starts to look over the different medical tools and grabs several of them. He trots back and sets the tools next to you. The tools being: a stethoscope, a small hammer, and a thermometer.

The process goes through quickly; the only interesting thing that happened was with the hammer. He used it to lightly tap your horn; which, in response sparked with some magic.

"Well, Heartbreaker," He says after he finishes, "Looks like you are a healthy unicorn; however, I will admit that I don't know why you have large hips but, it looks like it's nothing but, genetics."

He picks you up and trots into the hallway.

"At least your father won't have my head on a pike." He chuckles.

Okay, now for the time skip. You guys have three options to how far the time skip goes: 3 years, 5 years, or 8 years. I couldn't decide on how far the time skip should be so, you guys are now deciding.
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>>28109699
8 years!
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>>28109699
5 years
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>>28109699
5 years
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>>28109699
Meh, 5 I guess.
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>>28109699
Eight years
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>>28109722
>>28109734
>>28109793
It's been five years since you were born. Life as a raider has treated you well so far. The raider clan you lived with was small; about fifteen ponies lived in the clan, along with nine foals ,including you.

Your father; Junkrat is the leader of the clan. Your mother was a slave for the clan before Junkrat took power but, she was fine now.

The raiders; for some odd reason called the camp: Hoofard. Hoofard was a few miles from the ruins of Detrot; and above Stable 164. They just found Stable 164 when you were born and were still trying to get in.

You, your father, and your mother lived in one the bigger houses the clan has built. You currently have the house to yourself; when you woke up your father was gone. Probably to see if they have made progress with the Stable door.

Currently, you were having breakfast; which was a 200 year old box of sugar bombs. It was peaceful at the moment. Until there was a knock at the door; that startled you.

What do you do?
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>>28109956
don't open the door for strangers, look out a window though and try to see who is at the door.
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>>28109956
Dad taught us to check before answering. You gotta see them before they see you.
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>>28109956

Ask who is it?
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>>28110000
Daddy also taught us to grab the nearest lethal object to bash a stallion's skull in.
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>>28109956

Cautiously ask who is it?
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>>28109956
Say "Who the fuck is it?"
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>>28110125
In a cute filly voice.
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>>28109991
>>28110000
>>28110063
>>28110084
>>28110106
>>28110125
>>28110151
In your five years of life your dad has taught you a lot; two of those things were check the doors before you open them and grab the nearest lethal object to; as he would say: 'Smash their fucking skulls in and take their dicks!'

Using your magic, you grab the nearest lethal object you could get; which was a cleaver. Your magic wasn't the best but, it wasn't the worst either; you could already do basic levitation!

You creep towards the door. Knife hovering close to you. The door is a normal sheet metal door. Your dad cut a small flap next to the door so, you could see outside.

You try to open the flap to see who the knocker is but, it's frozen shut. So, you place your back near the door, place your cleaver in front of you and speak.

"Who the fuck is it?" You ask in your cute filly voice. Even though your dad swears a lot; for some reason he doesn't like it when you did it. The last time you cursed in front of your dad you couldn't walk straight for three hours but, you still did it but, when he's not around.

"It's me Heartbreaker," A colt's voice says from the other side of the door, "Nit Pick."

Nit Pick was one of your friends in the clan. Born around the same time as you.

What do you do?
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>>28110228

"Oh hey Nit Pick how are you doing?"
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>>28110228
ask if he's with anyone else.if not then open the door and let him come in. we can play our filly and colt games such as " raider vs caravaner" and pretend shoot each other.
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>>28110228
Smack her ass, as is our customary greeting.
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>>28110228

Open the door and give him a friendly smile.
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>>28110228
"Nit, say who you are faster next time. I almost took your dick!"
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>>28110228

Nit Pick is your mom feeling better? She didn't throw you out again did she?
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>>28110228

put the cleaver down but close to the door. Slowly open the door.
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>>28110247
>>28110259
>>28110260
>>28110261
>>28110269
>>28110273
Your suggestions are the best! I was laughing for a minute straight!

"Hey Nit Pick, are you alone?" You ask. You can hear Nit Pick sigh.

"Yes, I'm alone. Can you open the door; I'm freezing my ass off!"

You open the door and Nit Pick steps through. Nit Pick was a orange colored Pegasus with a black and blue mane and ruby red eyes; he kept his mane on the right side of his face and neck.

As he enters you slap his ass; which is your customary greeting with each other. He doesn't have his cutie mark but, neither do you.

"Nit, say who you are faster next time. I almost took your dick!" You tell him; closing the door to prevent the snow and wind from entering.

"Sorry for not knowing that you have a cleaver." Nit Pick deadpans.

"Is your mom feeling better," You ask, wanting to make small talk, "She didn't throw you out again did she?"

"She almost did." He tells you, "How was I suppose to know that the Radroach wasn't done yet."

While it's too cold to play outside you can still play inside.

"Do you want to play Raider vs. Caravaner?" You ask, "You can be the Raider this time."

A small smile grows on Nit Pick.

"I actually have something better," He tells you, "Yesterday, I found a cave outside of the clan. It's close by and there is nothing in there. Lot's of cool stuff, too. I was thinking that we could go take some of the cool stuff, want to come?"

What do you do?
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>>28110453
Agree and take the cleaver.
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>>28110453
What kind of cool stuff?
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>>28110453
how can cool stuff be in there if there is nothing there? but heck no, i ain't going out in that cold. we'll need a jacket or a blanket to wrap ourselves in.
we didn't even finish eating.
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>>28110453
Well, mom and dad might not like us wandering off, but it sounds pretty cool.
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Hey QM, can I request that you stop double spacing? It makes it hell to scroll through on my phone and is kind of ugly.
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>>28110453
Hey dude, could you not double space please?
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>>28110453
Take the cleaver and claim some dicks m8
claim his dick later too, with the fillypussy

also qm, could you stop double spacing? posts look a lot better without them.
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>>28110530
>>28110541
Sure.
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>>28110542
>>28110541
>>28110530
I feel a disturbance in the force.
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>>28110453
Agree to go. Have breakfast first though.
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>>28110453
Ask how can there be cool stuff if there's nothing in it?
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>>28110549
Thanks.
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you're all terrible children, our parents will be worried if we just leave the house. and more importantly, they will smack our butt
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>>28110584
I see nothing wrong with this.
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>>28110584
... so I'm hearing do it. I bet dad feels awkward when he disciplines us.
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>>28110602
Actually

>>28110453
"Sure! Maybe we'll even get in trouble and daddy will spank me again!"
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>>28110602
>Dad, I'm seventeen. Do you really have to spank me.
>Dad I didn't even do anything wrong, why are you spanking me?
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>>28110602
I bet it's pretty unnerving whenever your daughter moans when you spank her for being a bad filly.
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>>28110613
This a million times.
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>>28110617
>"You'll learn your lesson this time you bad filly!"
>"Oh I will daddy, yank my tail!"
>"wat"
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>>28110453

Agree to go but ask if he's going to wear anything to deal with the cold?
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>>28110632
I'm SO sorry I ruined your birthday present daddy. If ONLY there was something I could do to make it up to you.
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>>28110485
>>28110488
>>28110497
>>28110515
>>28110542
>>28110560
>>28110571
"Sure but, how can there be anything cool if there's nothing there."

"I meant that there is nothing living in there."

"Oh. Let me finish breakfast before we go."

You quickly finish breakfast, and put on your coat that your mom made you.
"What kind of cool stuff is there?"
"Lot's of cool stuff but, I can't spoil the surprise."
You grab the cleaver with your magic.
"Alright," You say, "I'm ready to go claim some dicks!"
Nit Pick laughs at that.
"I am worried about my parents finding out."
"It'll be fine." Nit Pick dismisses your worries.
"Yeah, maybe we'll even get in trouble and daddy will spank me again!"
"I don't get you sometimes." Nit Pick comments.
"Are you gonna wear anything for the cold?" You ask. At this Nit Pick freezes and sighs, he trots towards the door and turns to you before leaving.
"Meet me at the clan entrance; I need to get my coat really quick." He then leaves.

What do you do?

>>28110613
>>28110614
>>28110617
>>28110632
Goddammit guys.
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>>28110453
That sounds dangerous as shit, fuck that
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>>28110740
Get everything locked up and let's go.
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>>28110740
Coats are for nerds, go out without one
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>>28110740
Go back into daddy's room and make sure the good paddle is set out, then grab our coat and head on out.
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>>28110740

Put on a coat and take a few items. Perhaps a weapon or two.
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>>28110740
Smack our ass and head on down to the clan entrance. Make sure to tell an adult where we're going.
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>>28110740
Grab a healing potion just in case
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>>28110740

What spells do we know?
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>>28110740
>>28110800

>Make sure to tell an adult where we're going.

Let's not they may not let us go.
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>>28110740
Well, mom has an outfit that she says is for daddy on special ocassions. Maybe being cold is one of those! Lets grab that.
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>>28110836
Good idea, this is a special occasion after all.
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>>28110836
Kek. This.
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>>28110836
That's a bit of a stretch. I say not. Besides, something tells me it won't be warm if we do find it.
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>>28110836
The frilly tight nurse outfit has an enchantment to keep away the cold, it just isn't working yet.
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>>28110836
This.
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>>28110740
>Goddammit guys.
God damnit, i'm laughing.
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>>28110740

Find some clothes/armor that would keep us warm.
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Why would our parent's clothes fit us if we're meant to be five?
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>>28110891
>>28110836
>>28110854

Wouldn't that be too big for a 5yr old filly?
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>>28110921
>>28110922
Now this is adorable.

5 year old filly running around in sex clothes too big for her.
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>>28110922
>>28110934
Nyet, our shapely filly hips are the same as our mothers.
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>>28110944
We'd still be too short though.
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>>28110955
Hush, let the lewds work its magic.
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>>28110766
>>28110783
>>28110784
>>28110795
>>28110800
>>28110810
>>28110821
>>28110836
Your mind debates on if you should take a coat or not. You remember seeing something that mom likes to wear on special occasions with dad, maybe that will keep you warm. You find your parent's room and look for the outfit; you do find it. The outfit is a small, maids dress. You try to put it on but, it doesn't fit. Your hooves just touch the skirt and slip; you, sadly have to leave it... for now.

You put on your coat, make sure you have your cleaver, and a healing potion but, not before setting a paddle out in your parent's room. You've seen your dad use it on your mom before so, you know what it's used for.
You go outside; snow covers the ground and is falling from the sky, adding it to the ground.

You head towards the clan entrance; which is just two dead bodies on a pike. You wait there for a minute.

"What are you doing out here, Heartbreaker?" A raspy voice asks behind you. You nearly jump out of your skin and turn around; cleaver at the ready. Only to see that it's Zika; a ghoul that lives with your clan, he even helped deliver you on your day of birth.

"Little cold to be standing there isn't it?" He asks you.

What do you do?

Someday you'll be able to wear the maid outfit but, not right now. Have hope.
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>>28110944
Nah, the adorableness wins this round. We'll still be lewd as fuck in them, we'll just make most of the adults consider whether pedophilia is their thing at the same time.
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>>28111003
We're out chasing tail. Because we're following our friend and he has a tail.

Also because we want to fuck him.
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>>28111003

"Eh, it's not too bad. Our dad wants us to be a tough pony after all."
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>>28111036
Nyet
>>28111020
>>28111007
Yes
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>>28111003
"I'll be getting warm all over with Nit soon!" Because we'll run and play and whatnot right?
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>>28111003
Tell him we're dealing chems.
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>>28111003
>"Little cold to be standing there isn't it?" He asks you.

Not too bad. The cold air feels a bit fresher than our house at the moment. Ask how he's doing?
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>>28111003
is Zika a pony ghoul or a zebra ghoul?
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>>28111036
He did always want a son...
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>>28111122
I mean not really.
He's only attracted to females, after all.
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>>28111150
I'd rather the father not reciprocate the lewd.

More just like he's trying to be a good father but his daughter's naturally a slut. That way it's comedy and not creepy.
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>>28111020
>>28111066
>>28111080
>>28111081
"It's not too bad. Besides, We're chasing tail. Because we're following our friend and he has a tail, and we'll be getting warm with him soon."
Zika smirks at you and raises his brow. You then get a smile.
"I'm actually dealing chems. Want some?"
Zika lets out a laugh; floating out a cigarette from his coat pocket and lighting it with his magic.
"I've always liked you, Heartbreaker. You don't look like a raider but, you act like one."
True; your mane has always been curly and well kept.
Zika then looks around before speaking to you.
"Your dad will kill me for this, but," He partially reveals a full bottle of vodka from his coat.
"Want some vodka?"

What do you do?
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>>28111170
and by that I mean good father by raider standards.
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>>28111170
Seconded
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>>28111170
Well, its still creepy, but its less creepy. I like the sound of that, and I can agree to it.

>>28111175
Is that the juice that makes daddy all happy and hug mom a lot? That sounds great! Hugs are great!
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>>28111175
Oh boy, time for another tip.

The MC should not refer to themselves as "We" in your posts. She should refer to herself in the first person singular.
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>>28111175
Cool kids drink, have some but not too much. There's presumably going to be stuff in that cave, don't wanna be hammered.
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>>28111175

Sure take a sip but not too much. We've seen how ponies act when they get drunk.
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>>28111175
Boutta go explore shit bro, I'll drink with you later.
Also, drunken sex in caves isn't as good as sober sex in caves.
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>>28111175

It's not full Rads is it?
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>>28111175
Yessss, that's what adults drink!
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>>28111326
>>28111206
>>28111197
>>28111209
>>28111187
What these dudes said, maybe a sip or two.
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>>28111189
Well look at that. I made a mistake.
>>28111187
>>28111197
>>28111206
>>28111209
>>28111214
"Is that the juice that makes daddy all happy and hug mom a lot?" You ask
"If you want to put it like that then yes."
You've seen dad when he drinks that stuff. He usually gets happy and honestly... fun.
"I'll take a sip." You tell Zika.
"Alright." Zika pops the cork off and floats it over to you. You take it in your magical grip but, stop before you take a sip.
"Is this stuff irradiated?" You ask.
"Shouldn't be," Zika replies, "I found it in a Stable so, it shouldn't be."
You take a sip of the vodka; feeling it burn down your throat and into your stomach. After your sip you start coughing and float it back to Zika.
"Strong, huh?" Zika comments.
You nod, and reply after you stop coughing.
"I'll drink with you later; I have caves to explore."
Zika places the vodka in his coat.
"Alright," He replies, "I'll catch you later then."
He takes a few steps, before stopping and looking at you.
"Wait... cave exploring?"
...shit.

What do you do?
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>>28111363
I'll explore your cave anytime you want!
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>>28111363

Explain that it's a game where we pretend to be in cave looking for a Stable full of loot. Just like dad and the others.
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>>28111363
Y-yeah, I'm gonna explore Nit's cave!
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>>28111387
>Y-yeah, I'm gonna explore Nit's cave!
Woah, lewd. Will he be ok with that?
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>>28111399
Ok with what? We're just going to delve deep into Nit's cave! I bet he'll have fun with it!
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>>28111399
He invited us!
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>>28111399
Of course,
>>28111363
We're exploring that kids caves man.
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>>28111416
>>28111417
>>28111419
Now i'm legit confused about if we are talking in innuendos or not.
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>>28111433
That's the point of innuendo.
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>>28111433
We'll find out if we're exploring his cave when we're exploring his cave.
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>>28111363

Yeah, a snow cave. We'll build it and then we'll explore it.
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>>28111461
This excuse will probably work.
>>
Do you guys want a few more minutes to decide on a lie or innuendo?
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>>28111481
We're all solidly on innuendo territory, senpai.

Your protag is a lewdhorse.
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>>28111481
I think the snow cave one would work. Combine it with the lie that we are pretending that there is a stable in there.
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>>28111492
This.
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>>28111481
Innuendo all the way.
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>>28111492
>>28111481

This would work better. We are 5 after all. Not 15
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cocks and innuendo
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>>28111481
>>28111492

I say a Lie. Like we're just playing a game or something.
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>>28111563
>>28111528
Exploring his caves IS a game anon
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Okay, I think it's heading towards the snow cave and stable lie. I deeply apologize if there were more votes for the innuendo; I was just kind of confused with the voting.
>>28111385
>>28111461
>>28111465
>>28111500
>>28111528
>>28111563
"Y-yeah; Nit and I are gonna build a cave in the snow then pretend it's a Stable full of loot!" You top it off with a innocent smile.
Zika studies you for a bit; before facing away from you.
"Don't stay out too late." He then trots off.
A few seconds later you see Nit Pick who now has a coat with slits for his wings to pop out. He also has a bright red hoof mark on his left cheek.
"Ready to go?" He asks.

What do you do?

Again, I apologize if I counted the votes wrong. If I did then you can all stone me to death.
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>>28111612
Yep, let's go.
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>>28111612
uhh... What happened to your face? And I know you were born that way, but it's got a hoofmark on it now too.

And then playfully poke him in the chest as a sign that you're just teasing.
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>>28111612
She hit you again didn't she?
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>>28111647
I like this.
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>>28111612
Kiss his cheek better.
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>>28111612
Hey now, we may be super lewd but this nigga needs a hug right about now.
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>>28111660
>>28111647
Let's not be a cunt,
Give him a kissu and a hug.
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>>28111664
This.
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>>28111612
Hell yeah! I want to recover something big and ridiculous from the stable that I can make some explosions with!
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>>28111678
Fine, let's give him a smooch too, just to let him know we're just teasing. As poor of a time as this is to do so.
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>>28111612

Tell him to lead us to the cool stuff is at. Ask when did he find it?
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>>28111678
>>28111664
This.
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>>28111759
Why would we say we're trying to tease him rather than heal his boo-boo with our kisses?
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>>28111794
Cause sometimes we don't know what we should say to him, so we default to joking with him. Not thinking about how insensitive it could be seen as.
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>>28111624
>>28111651
>>28111664
>>28111665
>>28111678
>>28111691
>>28111743
>>28111771
"What happened to your face, did she hit you again?"
"Yeah," Nit Pick sighs, "Don't worry about, I've learned to live with it-"
You interrupt him with a hug, and a kiss on his injured cheek. You break away to see that his injury is camouflaged by a large blush that now adorns his face.
"L-let's go." He stammers and trots pass you.
"When did you find it?" You ask.
"What?"
"The cave."
"Oh, uh, I found it yesterday; I was bored and decided to explore a bit. After walking for a few minutes I found the cave."

After five minutes of walking in the snow, the two of you arrive at the cave; the snow has started to fall faster but, it's nothing to serious; you're surprise by how close the cave is to Detrot, as you can now make out the windows of the old buildings. The cave has a small, rectangular opening; which leads down into the earth by a set of stairs.
"Well, here's the cave." Nit Pick announces.

What do you do?
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>>28111850
Say "last one inside is a fgt" and then jump in without even bothering to check first.
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>>28111850
Hop inside reallly quickly and then tell him to cum inside in a sultry, welcoming tone.
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>>28111850
Ladies first.
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>>28111850

It looks like a basement.
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>>28111850
Thank Nit Pick and allow him to go down first.
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>>28111872
This.
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I think I'm gonna stop here tonight; I'm feeling quite drained. I do have a couple of questions for you guys for me to see when I wake up tomorrow.
Are you liking the CYOA so far?
What do you like about it?
What do you not like about it?
What do you think can improve this story to make it better?
Am I doing a good job?
And, that's all the questions. Keep this bumped for me so I can continue this tomorrow. I'm having a lot of fun writing this.
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>>28112023
I am lovin' this CYAO
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>>28112023
I'm enjoying the hell of out of it so far. Thanks for giving us a lewdhorse, which is great. I think the progression so far is good.
You're doing okay, bro.
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>>28112023
I like that you didn't make her 100% lewd.
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>>28112023
>>28112052
I like that he didn't go out of his way to completely nix it either. Most FOE quests live on the edge, having a silly lewd MC is a nice change.
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>>28112023
Don't rush yourself when moving the cyo along. Feel free to give the characters depth and personality.
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>>28112065
Lewd MC and fun adventures sounds like a nice change of pace from most FOE shit.
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>>28112037
>>28112052
Hilariously, I never planned for a lewdhorse. I was expecting something normal. You guys made it a lewdhorse and I found myself enjoying it; even laughing at the suggestion you guys made. I eventually decided: 'This is 4chan roll with it'
I am a little scared about making Heartbreaker 100% lewd. Probably because I've never written porn before. The closest I've done with porn was a heavily censored sex scene in a non-CYOA story.
>>28112065
My last CYOA was a edgy one that didn't get very far. So, I started writing silly but, somewhat serious stories that I ended up loving the hell out of! And, I love writing this CYOA much more than my last one; my muscles hurt from laughing and smiling so much while writing this.
My plan for this story will be to mix funny and serious moments; I've done it before with a story that I never published and I think it turned out well.

Let's hope this goes well, tomorrow! Please, keep this bumped for me as well.
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>>28112118
>I am a little scared about making Heartbreaker 100% lewd. Probably because I've never written porn before.
The worst that could happen is that we tell you it's shit and give you pointers on how to improve. No reason to be scared of trying new things on a Cambodian dread-weaving forum.
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>>28112118
Not to worry, I absolutely hate writing porn.

If it makes you feel better, don't ever feel like you're required to write porn. Players will understand if you just want to skip it and just say that lewd happened.
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>>28112171
Basically, in the long term lewd is more important than smut. But smut is still very good.
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>>28112184
Smut is very very nice, and it would be very appreciated.
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>>28112171
>just say that lewd happened
And leave an idea of how good the sex was, even if it was a really bad fuck. Bad sex can also be funny sex.
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>>28112023
So far so good. You've kept things relatively lighthearted and let the character be what the players wanted. I say just take your time and continue what you're doing.
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>>28112023
>Are you liking the CYOA so far?
Yes.
>What do you like about it?
Lighthearted and fun, which is a nice departure from traditional FoE.
>What do you not like about it?
So far no major fuck ups.
>What do you think can improve this story to make it better?
Proofreading could use some work.
"It's nothing to serious; you're surprise by how close the cave is to Detrot"
It's nothing TOO serious; you're SURPRISED by how close the cave is.
>Am I doing a good job?
Yes.
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>>28108578
Am I the only one who got Kamen rider kabuto: God Speed Love vibes when being first introduced to Fallout in general?
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>>28112523
Que?
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>>28112523
Yes, you are.
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>>28112567
I think their talking about the Tokusatsu Movie from Japan that takes place in a Post apocalyptic future that is a prequel to the show, "Kamen Rider Kabuto"...

The plot of Kamen rider Kabuto: God Speed Love is this...

A massive meteor hits the face of the earth. all the oceans of the world were evaporated and the rest of the land was left to be ravaged and destroyed by these alien bug like humanoid creatures that came along with the meteor called Worms. The world, lacking mass amounts of water and being ravaged by aliens and being hit by a huge Meteor from space, turns it into a wasteland-like setting.

the story revolves around the Kamen Riders of the main show "Kamen Rider Kabuto" and The Remenants of humanity, who struggle to survive the next few years as they search to restore the world's oceans and not be killed off by the worms while, at the same time, two factions are waging an all-out war on eachother, ZECT and Neo-ZECT.
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>>28111612
yeah sure. so how much of it have you explored? did you go all the way in?
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i hope we can find something super cool so that we can show all the other colts and fillies how great we are
>>
beb
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>>28112523
Well, at the end of fallout 3, the main character quite literally walks the path of heaven... Unless you have the broken steel dlc
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>>28114775
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>>28115904
Resubmitting vote for jumping inside and telling him to "Come inside" in a sultry and inviting tone.

Don't forget to post in the general once you've got a post up.
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>>28112171
If he doesn't like writing smut then sure. What he shouldn't be is afraid of it.
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>>28111872
>>28112009
>>28115940
You hope towards the entrance and stop just before entering it.
"Nit Pick, are you gonna 'come' inside?" You ask with a sultry but, welcoming tone.
Nit Pick follows you with a nod and you both enter the 'cave'.
After descending the small flight of stairs, you end up in a large clearing. The clearing is made of cement, on the far side a subway train has crashed through the wall; leaving one of the cars hanging from the wall, the clearing is littered with a large amount of random junk: guns, clothing, drugs, alcohol, and near the subway car; a full suit of power armor.
Nit Pick gives you a smirk as you look around.

What do you do?
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>>28116020
What's he smirking about? He's not allowed to smirk without us knowing. Go up to him and hang off him asking him what it was in a pleading manner.
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>>28116020
Woah, this is seriously cool Nit!
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>>28116047
We are a slightly needy hoers. Let's do this.
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>>28116020
Check out the guns. I'm sure we have a little bit of experience with weapons.
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>>28116020
>guns
Upgrade time.
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>>28116047
>>28116054
>>28116062
>>28116064
>>28116071
What's Nit Pick smirking about? He's not allowed to smirk without you knowing. You drape yourself across Nit Pick's back.
"What are you smirking about?" You ask in a pleading manner; accompanied with a small smile.
"No reason." He smiles.
"This is seriously cool, Nit!" You tell him; crawling off of his back. After you crawl off of his back you head towards one of the piles and start scrounging for guns.
Most of the guns you find are in poor condition but, you soon hit something good.
You find a large gun in good condition. It's almost as big as you with it's barrel being slender and ending with a small ball; surrounding the barrel are Tesla coils. The gun doesn't have a trigger but, it does have a strange sliding tool on it's side.

What do you do?
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>>28116148
Put something against the wall and try shooting it with the slidy thing.
>>
Guns are supposed to be great weapons!
to use weapons you hit things with them!
Set up a target and then hit it a whole bunch.
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>>28116169
I think we've seen the other raiders use guns.
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>>28116187
This. There's no way we don't know what a gun is.
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>>28116153
>>28116169
>>28116187
>>28116198
You've seen your clan use guns before; in fact, dad tried to teach you when you were three. It didn't end well.
You place a piece of cement on a wall and aim the gun at it; it's a little difficult but, you eventually get it.
You pump the slider a few times and watch as each time you do; the Tesla coils grow brighter with a blue glow.
After a few times it starts to shake a bit and makes a low whirring sound; the coils continue to get brighter.

What do you do?
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>>28116260
Pull the trigger
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>>28116260
Look for a button or anything to fire it.
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>>28116260
Keep pumping away.
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>>28116363
Encourage the gun, while we do so. "Oh yeah, you like that? LIke me pumping you up down? Feeling ready to burst? Are you close?"
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>>28116260
this is just like those times when we pump Nit's thingy, keep pumping it. Stuff will come out.
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>>28116260
DO IT FASTER! FASTER!
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>>28116269
>>28116293
>>28116363
>>28116378
>>28116382
You reach for the trigger but, then you remember that this gun doesn't have a trigger.
There is no button either.
"Are you close," You ask the gun, "Feeling ready to burst?"
You pump it for the sixth time; the gun unleashes a mighty bang, followed by a beam of magic shooting out of it.
The recoil makes you fall onto your butt. The beam hits the cement slab and bounces off of it. It hits several walls and objects; bouncing off of each one. After it hits a light it shoots towards Nit Pick; who is currently distracted by a skull, and using his hooves to make the jaw move. He doesn't know that the beam is flying towards him.

What do you do?
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>>28116260
We're experienced at pumping stuff, get to it.
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>>28116382
We haven't pumped Nit's "thingy." Not yet.
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>>28116395
shout duck, and something about cock.
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>>28116395
Jump in front of the beam body guard style.
Can't afford to loose our boy toy.
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>>28116408
Just tackle him. If we have time to jump in front of him we have time to tackle him out of the way.
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>>28116395
Grab the skull and move it in the way of the beam.
>>
>>28116431
But dad's gonna kill us if he finds out we saved a colt. He'll think we don't need him anymore.
>>
Gonna pause for a bit. I'm sorry; I just need to leave my house for something. I'll be back in under an hour.
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>>28116431
This.
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>>28116453
okay
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>>28116395
use your telekinesis to pull on nit.
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>>28116596
Can'take we use our magic to pull Nit out of the way?
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>>28116638
Seems like the best option.
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>>28116638
We are five, our magic probably isn't strong enough.
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>>28116677
I agree. We can do basic levitation, a cleaver was a bit of trouble to us.

A tackle is a more certain way to get him out of the way.
>>
>>28116705
>>28116677
Foal magic has been shown to be overpowered regularly. As long as you're not a cripple like the CMC apparently. Considering the emotional panic response, it's even more likely to work.

On top of that it's not like we can't try to do both. Panic magic while running.
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TACKLE THE CUNT!
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>>28116744
This
PUSSIES USE MAGIC
RAIDERS USE FUCKING STRENGHT AND ARE FUCKING SUICIDAL
ARE WE RAIDERS OR ARE WE PUSSIES?!
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Tackle him. Bonus points if we end up on top of him sensually.
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>>28116850
I like this, but are we really going to be faster than a magic beam of light?
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>>28116943
Fallout-verse lazers don't move that fast.
>>
I'm back. Sorry it took so long. It went way longer than I thought. Might be a short session today; I just got No Man's Sky and it's installing right now. I don't know but, back to the action!
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>>28116408
>>28116431
>>28116434
>>28116456
>>28116705

>>28116744
Goddammit! You made me spit my drink![/spoiler

>>28116850
>>28116943
>>28116961
You start galloping towards Nit Pick. Time seems to slow down as you gallop, faster than time itself.
You get to Nit Pick and push him out of the way and you use your magic to grab the skull.
Time speeds up once more; you float the skull in front of you.
The beam tears through the skull and flies towards you.
'...shit.' Is the last thing you think of as the beam then hits your face.

Cont.
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>>28117185
Oops... let's just ignore the large black censor bar and continue.
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>>28117185
>as the beam then hits your face
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>>28117185
"Heartbreaker?" You hear a voice calling you; it's distant but, you can hear it.
You come too. You're laying on the floor of the 'cave'. The left side of your face stings like nothing you've ever felt before.
Nit Pick is standing over you with tears in his eyes.
You open your mouth to say something but, instead Nit Pick kisses you on the mouth; taking you by surprise.

What do you do?
>>
>>28117231
Kiss back.
Grab for the dick
Silly QM. Removing half our faces won't stop us from being lewd.
>>
>>28117231
how bad is it?
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>>28117231
Cling to him. We're a clingy pony.
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>>28117231
Disregard missing half of face, acquire coltdick, gain badass raider scars.
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>>28117240
>>28117281
Let's not grab dick. At least wait for a good moment you horny bastards.
>>
Okay so; No Man's Sky has just finished installing for me. I'm gonna play it for a bit; sorry, if it feels like I'm ignoring you guys, I just want to play my new game for awhile. I'll be back in... 1-2 hours.
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>>28117324
it's kind of a shit thing to do (why are you even running today if you had planned to get this game?) but enjoy your time as you wish.
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>>28117231
"Do i have a badass scar?! Please tell me i do!"
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>>28117364
Yeah, it is a shit thing to do. I'll play the game for a hour then I'll come back. It's hard to do two things you like at once; and if I could do two things at once I would do this and No Man's Sky. But, the only thing I can do is a apology.
>>
I'm back; I played for an hour and now I'm back. Let's continue.
>>
>>28117324
Honestly, you would of been better off just saying you would be absent for a bit. You don't need to be specific about it cause then people whine that you aren't paying more attention to the quest. As long as you are pretty good about updating people and don't regularly leave them hanging, there isn't much of a valid reason to complain. It is your time after all, that you're giving away to entertain people.
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>>28117240
>>28117246
>>28117258
>>28117281
>>28117382
You kiss back and wrap your forehooves around him. The two of you stay like that for fifteen seconds. You can feel one of your forehooves reach down towards his dick but, he breaks the kiss; leaving both of you blushing.
"Are you okay?" He asks you; blushing.
You simply nod.
"I-is it bad?" You ask, "Do I have a scar? Please tell me I do!"
Nit Pick gets up and trots towards one of the piles. He grabs a piece of glass and trots back to you; holding the glass towards your face.

What does your scar look like?
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>>28117685
Well it wouldn't be a scar, it'd just be puffy raw flesh possibly with blood seeping out of it, getting in the way depending on the severity. In light of that, poke it then squeak in pain.
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>>28117685
it covers our cheek and stops right beneath the eye. it would be like a burn wouldn't it?
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>>28117685
We've got a patch over one side of our face, shit goes over the eye, blinking hurts.
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>>28117685
Zuko style scar maybe?
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>>28117712
This
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>>28117716
This sounds good.
Should give us more of that raider intimidation factor now.
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>>28117685
"Eh, the ones that dad gives me are better. At least this one might be for all my life!
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>>28117743
But I wanted to be pretty...
>>
What I'm seeing is a Zuko style scar that isn't really like it but, it's close, am I reading the votes correctly?
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>>28117774
I see your point...maybe we can compromise and make the scar not as bad.

Maybe it can loop around the eye somehow?
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>>28117789
I think so, at least that was the impression I got. Over the eye, but more badass than actually disfiguring so we can still be sex horse.
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>>28117803
Perhaps we tried to turn our face away from the beam but still got hit, resulting in something more like a glancing injury?

That way it could still be around the eye but not cause blindness in that eye or look too grotesque.
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>>28117823
This is exactly what I was thinking about. Not disfiguring like zuko but just as badass.
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>>28117712
>>28117716
>>28117739
>>28117743
>>28117774
>>28117803
The scar covers the left side of your face; making some sort of patch like scar. The scar surrounds your left eye. The only thing that has changed was your left eye has lost it's yellow pigment and is now white but, you can still see out of it.
You blink slowly and hiss in pain. Which causes Nit Pick to drop the glass and hug you.
"B-but, I wanted to be pretty..." You stammer.
"You are pretty." Nit Pick comforts; pulling you in closer and petting your puffy, orange mane.

What do you do?
>>
>>28117861
Go back to the raider camp and shove a stimpack in your face. Don't worry, most of it will fade and all that will be left is the badass part.
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>>28117861
"Would you fuck me even with this scar?"
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>>28117861
Guess we should go back and face the music.
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>>28117875
>>28117881
yep
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>>28117875
We brought a health potion before leaving the house.
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>>28117893
Yep, was about to tell you guys that we brought a healing potion.
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>>28117861
Seems alright to me. If Nit still thinks we're pretty I can live with it.
Hug Nit and say thanks.

I have the feeling were going to be very close to him as we grow up.
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>>28117893
>>28117908
Then let's take that shit.
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>>28117875
>>28117881
>>28117886
>>28117890
>>28117922
>>28117893
>>28117960
You take out your healing potion and drink it. Nit Pick grabs the glass again and presents it too you.
Your scar heals a bit; now, only covering a quarter of your left face, your eye doesn't heal but, it hurts less to blink.
"Would you fuck me even with this scar?" You suddenly ask.
Nit Pick chuckles.
"We'll see." Is all he says.
Nit Pick helps you up and you both trot towards the exit; intending to go back and 'face the gun barrel' as your father would say.
*SLAM! SLAM!*
The two of you are stopped by a loud noise. Turning around, you see that it's coming from the subway car. The slamming noise continues; as it does, the door of the car bends inward; towards you.

What do you do?
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>>28118002
RUN
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>>28118002
Get da fuq out of there. Be sure to take some sweet loot with you too.
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>>28118002
Grab the gun and run. Pump it as we go.
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>>28118002
Hide. we could pull this off.
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>>28118002
We should keep heading to that exit.
Do we still have that gun on us? That might come in handy.
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>>28118002
FIGHT THE CUNT!
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>>28118002
Run
AND PUMP THAT MOTHER FUCKING GUN LIKE IT'S MOMMIES TOY
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>>28118002
Run little slut, run.
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>>28118051
Goddammit, again! You nearly made me choke on my popcorn!
>>28118025
>>28118037
>>28118040
>>28118047
>>28118052
>>28118061
You quickly gallop towards the weapon you fired earlier. Taking it in your magic, you gallop back with some strain and start pumping it like that weird toy your mom has.
You and Nit Pick start galloping up the stairs; making you a little tired due to the heavy gun you are currently holding in your magic.
The two of you make it up the stairs.
*SLAM! CRACK!*
You hear the door break and look down the stairs to see a ghoul gallop and trip on the stairs. It stares up at with pure murder in it's eyes.
You and Nit Pick get outside. The snow has gotten worst; making it hard to see and your scar to hurt in the cold.
The ghoul is now halfway up the stairs and gaining.

What do you do?
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>>28118126
PUMP FASTER BABY
KILL THAT GHOUL SON OF A BITCH
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>>28118126
Might as well try and put our new sweet loot to the test.
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>>28118126
Blast it while it's stuck on the stairs, then run. Try to hit a leg if we can, because I doubt we'll kill it with one shot.
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>>28118126
We're not pumping it hard enough, it's too big, Nit needs to help us work the shaft!
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>>28118126
FUCK SOME SENSE INTO THE GHOUL!

WE CAN DO THAT, RIGHT?
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>>28118146
>>28118147
>>28118149
>>28118155
>>28118160
You face the ghoul and start pumping the gun faster. The gun soon starts shaking and whirring again. You aim the gun at the ghoul; who is now a quarter of the way up.
The gun roars and a beam fires from it. The recoil sends you on your ass, again.
The beam hits the ghoul's right forehoof. The hoof bends 90 degrees, and the ghoul tumbles down the stairs. The ghoul stops at the bottom but, gets back up and starts making the climb again but, much slower.
You hear more growling from the cave; signaling that more ghouls are coming.
Nit Pick is shaking but, you can't tell if it's out of fear or the cold.

What do you do?
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>>28118247
Time to run. Head straight for camp and yell once we get near.
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>>28118247
Ok fuck this, we are outta here. We, uh, might want to warn anyone in the village that there is a feral ghouls nest in the cave thinger.
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>>28118259
this
>>
I would like to ask something. As I plan ahead in this story I find that it gets more and more serious; I want to somehow make this story serious but, also light hearted and funny. Do you anons have any tips on how to pull this off? I want to keep this enjoyable for all of you.
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>>28118291
Keep it lighthearted in the slice of life segments.

it seems like the brutality of combat is unavoidable given what you've planned.
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>>28118247
More
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>>28118291
My advice is plan only the barest minimum so you have complete freedom to change everything on the fly if you need to adjust the level of seriousness, humor, or anything else up or down. Keep it flexible.
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>>28118291
it's in the personal character interaction between the mane cast and in the personality of the characters you know.

dialogue is the key for working levity into your shit.
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>>28118247
Tell Nit to stop shaking like a pussy starand run like a pussy
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>>28118247
run, but do it really sexy.
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>>28118309
left my name. my bad- don't really know what happened there.
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What a great cyoa you got there op! But do you know what is great too? The new DLC, Nuka-Worldâ„¢ for Fallout 4â„¢, I really hope you pre ordered it, didn't you?
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>>28118329
Shake what ya mama gave ya!
I mean, if you can do that WHILE running for your life. Can't impress Nit Pick-senpai if you're ghoul-feed.
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>>28118291
Ultimately the consequences of things is decided you.
You can tailor how things turn out by toning things down.
The eye injury is a good example.
You could have just made it a horrible disfigurement, but that would have been pointless and grim.
As a fan of FoE, it can be needlessly edgy sometimes. If you ever feel like something should happen because this is FoE, ask yourself if you couldn't just do something more fun instead.
For example, in your place I might have some plan right now for the ferals to end up as the village's pets, or something like that.
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>>28118309
Minus the namefagging, you're right. Character interactions keep things light.

I don't know if you read Urban Survival, but that was a quest with murder, drugs, and general brutality.
However, the quest is seen as a lighthearted slice of life comedy, since scenes like Gar getting caught underneath a cardboard box, getting trussed up by breezies armed with toothpicks, and simple character interactions were the focus of the quest. They were certainly more common than shooting drug dealers.
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>>28118303
Say no more.
>>28118259
>>28118264
>>28118270
>>28118317
>>28118329
You quickly get up.
"Nit, stop shaking like a pussy and run like a pussy!" You shout at him.
"It's the cold!" He snaps, before turning and galloping away.
You gallop after him; but, it's hard to gallop sexily so you just do a normal gallop.
The quickly falling snow makes it hard for the two of you to see; and the cold was really irritating your scar.
After what seems like a few hours, the two of you are able to see the clan houses through the snowstorm.
"We're almost there!" Nit Pick pants.
A screech rips through the area and Nit Pick is tackled by a ghoul.
He rolls in the snow with the ghoul; screaming as it sinks it's teeth into his right forehoof, and scratching his body with the others.
"Heartbreaker, help me!"

What do you do?
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>>28118391
Charge it and stab it through the eye with our big horn.
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>>28118391
"YOU CAN'T TOUCH MY BOY TOY YOU FUCKING GHOUL"
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>>28118391
Bash it with our massive booty!
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>>28118391
KILLITKILLITKILLLITKILLIT
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>>28118391
Hopefully the gun will fire off quick enough before the ghoul can do too much damage, otherwise poor Nit isn't going to be a character in this story for too long. Since we should be able to get close, aim for the head.
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>>28118404
Confirmed. Unicorn horns are meant for warding off evil, do just that.
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>>28118391
Cleaver it in the face, or did we drop the cleaver
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>>28118438
You still have the Cleaver. I'm surprised that you guys never used it.
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>>28118438
Oh, yeah. I forgot about that let's use it.
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>>28118422
That's for pussies, i vote we put a fucking hole in his skull with our sexy horn
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>>28118391
STOMP ON THE CUNT!
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>>28118391
pic related
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>>28118371
see
>>28118334

i goofed leaving the name on, t. other writefag.
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>>28118404
>>28118406
>>28118414
>>28118436
>>28118438
>>28118451
>>28118455
You drop your gun and float out your cleaver.
"YOU CAN'T TOUCH MY BOY TOY YOU FUCKING GHOUL!" You scream at it.
You rush at the ghoul horn first.
Your horn stabs the ghoul in the eye, while you use the cleaver to chop at it's neck.
New combo unlocked: Cleaver girl
The ghoul let's out a screech and raises it head, raising you with it. You get a few more chops in before it throws you off.
You land a few feet away; horn covered in dead skin and rotten blood. The ghoul has stopped attacking Nit Pick and is now staring at you with death in it's one good eye.
Nit Pick is on the ground; sniffling and holding his wounded leg.
The ghoul unleashes a roar and charges at you.

What do you do?
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>>28118507
Could we leave everything behind and try to levitate Nit Pick and escape?
Just asking, though
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>>28118507
EAT THE CUNT.
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>>28118507
Chop it into bits, then get Nit Pick back to camp so his wounds can be treated.
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>>28118507
Hamstring it, leave it twitching, pick up our boy toy and leave.
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>>28118507
Drive the clever inside its head as it's coming at us. The added force from the charge should finish it off.
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>>28118577
Use it's momentum against it, I like it.
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>>28118507
Duck under it's charge and impale it on our horn, pikeman style. Then cleaver it's back legs or junk
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>>28118507
Level our horn and try for the same combo. We're taking his dick!
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>>28118585
Let's not go for genital mutilation.

That's way too edgy.
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>>28118522
>>28118527
>>28118547
>>28118577
>>28118582
>>28118584
>>28118585
As it charges you, you quickly duck your head down and put your horn forward. The ghoul ends up impaling it's head on your horn.
Cleaver Girl combo activated
The momentum causes it to flip. As it does, you use the cleaver to stab it's chest; as the cleaver gets closer to the ghoul's dick, you turn the cleaver sideways and chop it's dick off.
The ghoul lands several feet away. It twitches once then stops moving. It's dick lands next to you.
You trot towards Nit Pick; who has lost consciousness. You try to pick him up with your magic but, using it as a stabbing tool twice has made it useless for now.
You pick Nit Pick up and start trotting towards the clan entrance.
Before you can, another screech stops you and another ghoul charges you.
*BANG!*
A bullet size hole ends up in the ghoul's head and it falls before you.
Turning around you see Zika with a smoking Revolver, and a collar with a chain draped across his back.
He trots over to you with a neutral expression.
"Was this part of your game?" He asks.

What do you do?
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>>28118665
We're not dead yet so I'm going to say yes.
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>>28118665
[Guilty slutfilly noises]
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>>28118620
I get what you saying, but feral ghouls are kind of like zombies right.
Isn't less edgy to cut a semi-zombies dick off then a living pony's dick off?

I'm not voting to cut the things dick off by the way I'm just curious about your logic. The action kind of seems more silly to me than edgy, especially if it reacted in a funny way.
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>>28118665
puff up your cheeks and scrunch remaining silent
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>>28118665
just say Yes
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>>28118665
>"Was this part of your game?" He asks

OF COURSHE!
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>>28118686
Stop.
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>>28118665
M-maybe!
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>>28118665
The game got a bit too real for my tastes, honestly. Had no idea that was gonna happen.

We need to get Nit some medical attention before you ask too many questions.

We also want to direct your attention to this sweet gun that we found and you should let us keep it cause it was how we defended ourselves. Please don't tell our parents. Pls.
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>>28118665
If it was, there wouldn't be the possibility of more coming. We should get ready for an attack.
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>>28118680
I'd find it funny if it's our go to in any fight no matter how serious. Just make any male party members cringe every time.
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>>28118665
Welp, we're in trouble.
But seriously, give him Nit Pick, so he can get to whomever constitutes a doctor at camp.
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>>28118620
>>28118680

Because daddy does >>28110228

Now we need to take our trophy and show dad.
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>>28118680
Any level of genital mutilation makes me very uncomfortable.
It's just not necessary on any level.
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>>28118665
Tell him we imagined too hard and the ghouls became real
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>>28118769
This
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>>28118620
>>28118743
Who knew there would be a argument on dick chopping. I'm gonna apologize for those that didn't want to chop the ghouls dick off. I can't really change the post so, I'm sorry.
>>28118702
Oh... I'm sorry as well; but, tell me: what made it too real?
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>>28118798
I'm pretty sure that was talking to the character.
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>>28118798
>>28118702 Seemed like an in character post.
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>>28118824
Yep, just found that out. Can someone please slap me, come on don't be shy, I need to wake up anyway.

Also gonna eat dinner; I'll be right back.
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>>28118743
I just wanted to stay the slightest bit true to our raider heritage.
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>>28118798
That was supposed to be a snarky-ish in character response to Zika . Sorry for the confusion.

>>28118824
>>28118828
Both these anons nailed it on the head. Though I probably said it in a confusingly worded way.
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>>28118769
definitely this or
>>28118686
memes
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>>28118769
Isn't Zika a ghoul?
If so maybe we should say monsters rather than ghoul, so he doesn't get the wrong idea.
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>>28118878
Say ferals then I guess, although he'll probably get what we mean.
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>>28118675
>>28118681
>>28118682
>>28118699
>>28118702
>>28118703
>>28118718
>>28118769
>>28118781
>>28118848
You puff up your cheeks and scrunch your muzzle. Zika remains neutral.
Finally, you give in.
"Yes. The game just got too real for my tastes, and I imagined them too hard. Had no idea that was gonna happen. And, before you ask any questions, Nit needs medical attention. Also-"
You manage to float your new gun over.
"-This is my new gun. I used to defend myself and Nit... please don't tell my parents."
"I don't have to tell them," Zika says, "Because, they tore the place apart looking for you and Nit Pick. Heck, your mother was crying and she doesn't cry a lot."
Zika sighs.
"Come on, let's get you and Nit back to the clan."
He starts to lead you back to the clan, until another ghoul rushes out of the snowstorm.
Zika approaches the ghoul. As it gets close, he grabs the ghoul, throws it into the snow, and quickly puts the collar and chain leash on it, along with a muffler.
He gets up and trots back to you; feral ghoul in tow.
"There are more coming?"
"Yeah."
Zika sighs and trots towards the clan entrance with you and a captive feral ghoul.

The two of you enter the clan center. Several raiders are gathered there with your father and mother. Your mother is crying and Nit Pick's mother is arguing with your father.
Nit Pick's mother was the only other Pegasus in the clan; as well as the oldest.
Your mother looks towards you as you approach and breaks away from the group. She tackles you with a hug and tears in her eyes.
Nit Pick is promptly picked up by Zika.
"My little filly is safe!" Your mother cries as she hugs you.
Your father then approaches looking less than pleased with you.

What do you do?
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>>28118945
Hug mom, inform dad we blasted and chopped some ghouls super good.
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>>28118945
Hug the mother.
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>>28118945
Hug mom, tell dad we chopped off a ghoul's dick. That ought to lighten the mood.
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>>28118945
tell him we saved Nit Pick, found some sick loot, and killed some ghouls.
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>>28118945
>>28118976
And we got a badass scar and pleasemakesureNitisok. [worried horse noises]
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>>28118945
sup pa, ma
claimed me first dick today
check muh new gun too
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>>28118945
Sorry, for making you worry.
We're playing outside and then a feral ghoul came. Then we had to save Nit twice, its ok though cause he wasn't being a wuss, he just got caught off guard.
...Did we get our cutie mark?
Cock chopping cutie mark, please.
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>>28118945
You guys won't believe what just happened to us! And before you get too mad, pls look at Nit. He hurt.

Please accept this gun as a token of my sorryness.
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>>28119021
Please no.
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>>28119024
I forgot to add that we should hug the mom unit back.
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>>28118961
>>28118963
>>28118971
>>28118976
>>28118997
>>28119005
>>28119024
You hug your mom back. Your father continues to just stand back.
"Hi mom," You turn to your dad, "Hey dad, we blasted and chopped some ghouls, I even took one of their dicks."
Your dad's expression lightens a bit.
"We also saved Nit Pick, and found some sick loot. We also got a badass scar!"
"Wait, scar?"
Your mother breaks the hug and looks at your face; she gasps at your scar. Even your father looked a bit surprised at the scar.
"Please look at Nit, he's hurt."
Your father nods and trots towards Zika; your mother hugs you again and starts to cry harder.
"Anything to say, Zika?" Your father asks him.
"They apparently woke up a feral ghoul nest; they're coming right for the clan."
Your father nods and faces the clan.
"Get your weapons. Feral ghouls are coming and everypony needs to be prepared!"
Most of the raiders then go to their makeshift houses for weaponry. Nit Pick's mother trots past you and gives you a grateful smile.
"Zika, can you make sure that Heartbreaker and Nit Pick get medical attention." Your father asks.
Zika simply nods.
Your father then looks at you.
"We'll talk later." He tells you before trotting off; leaving you with Zika and your mother; who is still hugging you.
She breaks the hug after few seconds, gives you a sad smile, and trots after your father.
"Come on, Heartbreaker," Zika says, "We need to make sure you didn't break anything."

What do you do?
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>>28119101
No, I need to fight with the clan!
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>>28119101
We should stick with Nit. Our magic is dead right now, so we probably can't even shoot right now.
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>>28119101
We wanna stay and fight, but we're probably tuckered out enough that we would just get in the way. Stick with our poor boy toy and friend for now.
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>>28119101
Let's go with Zika and mom, to make sure Nit is ok.
>>
Tell Nit that now he HAS to have sex with us
>>
We are getting close to the end of the first part of Heartbreaker's childhood. My plan is to highlight the main events of Heartbreaker's childhood before we get into the real story. Too, set up the main character before things kickoff.
>>28119133
>>28119165
>>28119217
"I want to stay and fight!" You say to Zika. You probably would be more convincing if you didn't yawn after saying that.
"Yeah, no. You're in no condition to fight." Zika tells you; using his magic to lift you on his back with Nit, "Let the adults handle it."
After you're placed on Zika's back next to your boy toy, you fall asleep.

You wake up indoors, on a metal table. Zika is nearby; gathering tools and such.
"You're awake," Zika says without looking at you, "I'm not surprised that you fell asleep, after what transpired."
You can hear muffled gunshots.

What do you do?
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>>28119323
H-how's the fighting going?
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>>28119323
Is Nit okay?
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>>28119323
Check on Nit
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>>28119323
How long have they been fighting?
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>>28119323
Ask how long the fight has been going on, and where Nits is at. And what can we do to help the fight.
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>>28119330
>>28119332
>>28119341
>>28119352
>>28119364
"Is Nit okay?" You ask.
"Yeah, he's fine. Woke as I started to bandage his wounds; he asked if you were okay. Tried to get up and find your room." He tells you; trotting back to you with a flashlight, a little hammer, and some bandages.
"H-how's the fighting going, have they been fighting for long?"
"Not very long, only five minutes so far."
"Is there anything I can do to help?"
"What you can do is sit there like a good little filly, and let me do my work." Zika tells you; flicking the flashlight on and off a few times.
He then shines the light into your left eye.
"Well, your eye is fine; the pigment is just gone."
He puts the flashlight away and floats the hammer over. It lightly taps your horn; small sparks of magic fly out.
"Your horn isn't damaged, thankfully. Just drained; it'll come back soon."
He puts the hammer away and lightly touches your scar.
"Does this hurt?" He asks you.

Does it hurt?
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>>28119437
N-no.
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>>28119437
Not really, no.
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>>28119437
It's a bit sore, but nothing more.
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>>28119437
Just a twinge of discomfort from a light touch.
A more definite touch would cause something closer to pain.
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>>28119437
i want to say yes because that means we still have feeling in it.
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>>28119462
This because it's not fully healed, right?
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>>28119437
Ask him if we'll ever be pretty again.
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>>28119437
Heh, yeah.
We took a tesla blast to the face, its no big deal.
Do we look like a raider now?
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>>28119445
>>28119457
>>28119461
>>28119462
>>28119542
>>28119546
"N-no, not really. Just some discomfort."
"That's to be expected." Zika says; placing his hoof down, "Your scar isn't fully healed, you'll have for your lifetime. But, I don't want you to touch it; that might damage the nerves permanently and then you won't be able to feel that part of your face."
"Yeah, I took a Tesla blast to the face."
"Then that explanes the gun." Zika says; putting away the medical equipment and bandages, "You do look more like a raider."
"Will I be pretty again?" You ask, suddenly.
This causes Zika to stop and chuckle.
"Let me tell you a secret, Heartbreaker," Zika starts, "Stallions secretly dig scares. I should know; you look like a Tiger that just walked out of a battlefield... actually, that might not be the right analogy."

What do you do?
>>
Stopping for tonight. I'm really tired and running out of steam. Keep this bumped for me, tonight. Tomorrow's session should be longer and have less interruptions.

Are you guys still liking the CYOA so far?
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>>28119600
Thank him for helping you and find Nit.
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>>28119600
"I don't know what a tiger is, but that sounds awesome!"
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>>28119606
It's good, I'm liking it so far. Keep doing what you're doing.
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>>28119606
>Are you guys still liking the CYOA so far?
Yes.
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>>28119606
Yeah, it's looking pretty good right now.
Good night.
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>>28119600
So... I do look pretty?
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>>28119606
I'm liking it so far. You might want to work on your transitions though. There's a few spots where the MC says/does something in one obvious tone and then about faces abruptly. Like here

>"We also saved Nit Pick, and found some sick loot. We also got a badass scar!"
>"Wait, scar?"
>Your mother breaks the hug and looks at your face; she gasps at your scar. Even your father looked a bit surprised at the scar.
>"Please look at Nit, he's hurt."

Excitement to worry immediately with no transition. Even something simple like "You shake off your mother's hooves and your excitement as you look in worry to Nit" would work. You've done admirably at including commands, but if they're of different tones there needs to be something between them.
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>>28120344
>>
Bippity-boppity-bump
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Sorry for the shitty colors, wish I knew more of how this cutie looks like but for now have this while we wait for moar.
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>>28121671
Very noice.
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>>28119606
I like it, although I have to ask. You don't seem to be native speaker, right? Your writing has a lot of repetition and doesn't really flow that well because of it
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>>28121671
Imagine when her first heat hits her like a freight train. Her dad probably had to tie her down to keep from getting pregnant.
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>>28122141
I lived in America for most of my life but, I spent a few years of my childhood in France. So, I'm not a native speaker but, I know how to speak English. It's just that I haven't been writing for very long; only about two years. But, I will say that my writing has improved greatly since I started. It could still use some work obviously but, It's better.
>>28121671
Oh mon Dieu, I love it! You have brought a smile to my face this morning. I didn't exactly imagine Heartbreaker having those shades of blue and orange but, it's perfect. Excuse me while I go save this picture; it must be preserved!

Also, I'm starting in a hour. It looks like we're close to the bump limit; when It gets there I'll make a new thread the moment it hits the bump limit.
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>>28122683
you can wait til the quest falls to page 8-10 before making a new thread no problem. /mlp/ isn't THAT fast of a board
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>>28122683
>>28122835
This. You usually have a bit more than 3 hours after it hits bump limit before it falls off. No need to rush to make a new thread.
>>
Let us continue, shall we?
>>28119609
>>28119611
>>28119642
"So... I do look pretty?" You ask with concern.
Zika chuckles again.
"Yes."
You feel a smile grow on your face.
"I don't even what a tiger is but, it sounds awesome!" You tell him.
"I'll tell you when you're older." Zika says to you.
You quickly thank Zika and trot towards the door; intending on seeing Nit.
"Heartbreaker, wait."
Zika stops you at the door.
"You forgot this." He floats your Tesla Blaster to you.
"You won't be able to use magic for awhile but, I think you can still carry this; after all, your parents are Earth Ponies."

What do you do?
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>>28122835
>>28122843
He doesn't need to wait if he doesn't want to either. /cyoa/ got in the habit of that back when it was going through 2 threads a day to be a bit more board conscious, a thread that gets a new one every few days is less of an issue. Up to him really.
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>>28122884
Sure. It's awesome and we got an awesome scar from it and learned the awesome lesson 'don't shoot yourself'.
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>>28122884
Take it with a smile. "I just love pumping this thing until it explodes. I could do this all day.~"
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>>28122915
>>28122922
You take in your hooves with a smile.
"Yeah, It's awesome," You say, "We got a awesome scar from it, and I just love pumping this thing until it explodes. I could do it all day~"
"Goddammit, Heartbreaker." Zika says to you; which placing a hoof on his face, "Anyway, you're free to go."
You exit the room and into a hallway. You could still hear gunshots but, they were becoming less frequent.
As you trot down the hall, you pass a door. As you near it, it opens a bit and Nit Pick's head pokes out. His mane is disheveled and he has bags under his eyes.
He doesn't seem to notice you as you get closer.

What do you do?
>>
>>28122980
Hey Nit Pick, you feeling alright?
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>>28122980
Nit Pick, now that we'e saved your life, we own your cock. We're just going to leave it on your body, so make sure you don't make us regret that decision.
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>>28122980
boop him on the nose!
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>>28122980
Surprise hug.
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>>28122991
>>28122994
>>28123000
>>28123039
You trot closer to Nit Pick and boop his nose. His muzzle instinctively scrunches and his eyes go crossed.
"Hey Nit Pick, you feeling alright?"
He looks at you and gives you a strained smile.
"Yeah... I'm fine," He says, "Just... resting. I guess you own my cock now?" He laughs; after the laugh, his face becomes sad and his eyes distant.
You give him a hug but, he doesn't seem to react; he just sniffs.

What do you do?
>>
>>28123053
What's wrong Nit?
>>
>>28123053
Yeah, I do. And I don't like seeing the stallion who has to carry it all sad and mopey.
Really, what's eating you?
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>>28123053
Nuzzle his mane "C'mon fuckboy, don't cry! I'll treat you well!"
>>
>>28123077
This.
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>>28123077
>>28123082
You nuzzle his mane; getting another sniff out of him.
"C'mon fuckboy, don't cry! I'll treat you well!" You tell him.
"It's not that." He says, "It's just... when we were running from the ghouls. You stood your ground; shooting and stabbing them. Heck, I wouldn't be hear if it wasn't for you. But, what did I do? Nothing. I did nothing but... watch as you fought and I just stood back like a fucking coward! You could've gotten killed by them and I did nothing!"
Nit Pick starts to sniff some more. You feel some tears land on your mane.

What do you do?
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>>28123105
well then, next time remember to bring your own knife to stab something.
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>>28123105
Shh, it's alright.
You were hurt, Nit, you were hurt so bad that you passed out. There's no way anypony could blame you for not fighting.
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>>28123105
"At least you kiss really good..." Slut filly face
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>>28123131
This.
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>>28123128
>>28123131
>>28123143
"Shh, It's alright," You comfort him, "You were hurt, Nit, you were hurt so bad that you passed out. There's no way anypony could blame you for not fighting. At least you kiss really good." You give Nit your best 'slut filly face' however, it was a face you've seen your mom do when she was in something called: heat.
This gets Nit to stop crying and smile at you.
"Yeah... but, no kisses until I'm healed." He tells you.
Nit Pick breaks the hug and trots back into his room. Before he closes the door, he gives you a grateful smile.
You are left in the hall.
The gunshots have stopped.

I was thinking of a time skip to the next highlight of Heartbreaker's life; do you guys want to do anything else as a five year old or just go ahead with the time skip?
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>>28123193
Nope, I'm good to timejump
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>>28123193
I think we can move on.
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>>28123193
I think we're good here.
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>>28123201
>>28123204
>>28123221
Okay, once again: you guys get to choose how far we go for Heartbreaker's next childhood highlight. We can do:

3 years: you'll be eight.
5 years: you'll be ten
or 8 years: you'll be 13

What do you choose?
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>>28123235
10 or 13 could be cool.
if we're 13 we can have our first real heat.
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>>28123235
Lets go thirteen, when we become a real slut and earn our cutie mark for it.
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>>28123235
8 years.
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>>28123235
8 years
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>>28123235
8 years
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>>28123245
>>28123247
>>28123248
>>28123250
>>28123255
8 years, huh? This is gonna be good.
The raiders won the battle against the ghouls; nopony died thankfully. That night your father did punish you... with the paddle. Let's just say it was enjoyable for you.

It has now been eight years; you are thirteen years old now.
Earlier that morning you woke up feeling strange. Your mother got Zika to take a look at you and he told you and your parents that you are in your first heat.
Your father was not very happy about the news and has forced you to stay inside and away from other colts; even though it's only the first day.
Your parents are currently gone. They left to raid a small wasteland village that has set up a few miles away. Leaving you alone in the house.
You are currently laying in your bed. Your father pretty much tied you to your bed; using old blankets to keep your hooves down.
Your loins are burning with a passion; vagina winking every so often.

What do you do?
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>>28123298
Try not to think about how good it felt to have dad grab us, hold us, tie us down... We're gonna get a fetish for this. What was he thinking?

Next, use our magic to untie the blankets. Earth ponies make funny mistakes sometimes.
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>>28123298
"NIT! I KNOW YOU'RE HEARING ME! GET YOUR PENIS HERE OR I'LL MURDER YOU WHEN I'M OUT!"
>>
>>28123298
>>28123309
No. Leave ourselves all tied up. Nit was supposed to come over today.
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>>28123298
use teeth to take off blanket tying us down.
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>>28123298
jokes on him, we like this.
shout out for nit
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>>28123298
NIIIIIIIIIT!
>>
>>28123319
this
>>
Quick question! I know that I'm not allowed to post pornographic images but, can I post written porn or is that not allowed?
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>>28123365
you can write all the porn you want and in graphic detail.
>>
>>28123365
I've never seen written porn banned on this board.
>>
>>28123365
How long have you been here? Of course you can, my black person!
>>
>>28123365
Try taking a look at Night Delivery for the answer here.
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>>28123365
see
>>28111230

Writing porn is fine. You can also post links to porn, ala >>>/trash/4580373 or https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2016/8/8/1220516.png

The only restriction is posting images.
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>>28123385
Since mid May.
>>28123319
>>28123326
>>28123333
>>28123344
>>28123359
'Jokes on you," You think in your head, 'this is my secret fetish!'
You hear the door open and close. You knew exactly who it was; Nit Pick was suppose to come over today but, he was early.
"Heartbreaker? Are you here?" You hear him call out.
"NIIIIIIIIIIIIIT! GET YOUR PENIS HERE!" You yell.
You hear him trot towards your room; getting closer and closer until the door opens.
Nit Pick takes one look in the room; before yelping and covering his eyes with a hoof.
"Gah! H-heartbreaker, why are you like?!"

What do you do?
>>
>>28123446
My parents aren't here, you don't have to act like you don't see this regularly. Now suck on my click!
>>
>>28123446
IN HEAT. NEED COCK.
>>
>>28123446
"What do you think, fuckface?! Give me your sperm! And i'll kill you if you think of untying me..."
>>
>>28123466
clit*
>>
>>28123446
i need you to start licking and sucking
>>
>>28123446
Stop being a PUSSY and start with the DICK!
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>>28123446
Well, I was just lounging on the bed, hoping you would come by so we could discuss the finer points of resource management, specifically with regard to water conservation and irrigation, as I have many ideas as to how to improve our settlement here.

What are you stupid? I'm in my first heat, dad tied me to the bed, and I need something in my vagoober. I'll let you work out the details. Surprise me.
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>>28123555
Gave me a kek, so I'm voting for it.
>>
>>28123446
>Gah! H-heartbreaker, why are you like?!
"My dad said he was afraid I'd rape the entire camp and no I don't have that backwards."
>>
>>28123466
>>28123468
>>28123472
>>28123481
>>28123492
>>28123518
>>28123555
>>28123586
"Are you stupid," You snap, "I'm in my first heat, my dad is afraid that I'd rape the entire camp and no I don't have that backwards, and I need something in my vagoober!"
Nit Pick sighs and puts his hoof down.
"Alright, what do you want me to do?" He asks.
"What do you think?! I need you to lick my clit and give me your sperm! I'll kill you if you untie me!"
Nit Pick sighs once more and trots over to your bed. He lays down and sniffs your pussy a few times; he sticks his tongue out and licks your outer lips, making you gasp.

What do you do?

First time writing uncensored porn. Let's hope this goes well.
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>>28123606
Moan in encouragement? We're tied down, there's not much for us to do right now.
>>
>>28123606
Keep going. I'm kind of tied up here, so it's not like I'm going to be taking the reigns any time soon.
>>
>>28123606
Oh fuck, stick it in. FUCKING STICK IT IN NOW OR I'LL MURDER YOU
>>
>>28123606
Harder you wimp! It's not a fucking glass figurine!
>>
>>28123606
There you go nit. Keep doing that. Don't be afraid to stick your tongue in. Thrust your hips up occasionally.
>>
>>28123606
That was good. Not GREAT. But good. Now try again and lick harder. Put your whole face in there.
>>
>>28123606
"I'm just a defensless villager, mister raider! Please don't brutally rape!"
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>>28123624
>>28123626
These are best
>>
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>>28123606
Wrap our legs around his head and shove his in there. Drown him with our puss juice.
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>>28123606
Combine the "harder you wuss" stuff that >>28123630 and >>28123626 said, along with >>28123635 also, just to confuse the hell out of him.

We have very complicated sexual tastes.
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>>28123655
I adore the sound of this.
Sometimes we just get so excited we end up combining all of our fetishes in one glorious, lewd clusterfuck.
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>>28123663
That sounds fucking hilarious
>>
>>28123678
I WANT TO BE ON TOP. No wait. LICK MY PUSSY YOU BITCH. Hey are those ropes over there? Where's my dildo...?
>>
>>28123663
I NEED YOU TO DOMINATE ME WHILE TREATING ME LIKE A PRINCESS AND PRETENDING TO BE A ZEBRA RAIDER AND YOU NEED TO FIRE A LASER RIFLE INTO THE AIR RIGHT AS I CLIMAX THIS ISNT HARD YOU DUMB FUCKER!
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>>28123655
>Nit gets confused and stops looking up
I NEVER SAID TO STOP DICK FOR BRAINS, KEEP GOING
>>
>>28123606
He's taking too long, shove his snoot in there.
>>
https://discord.gg/PstRjZW
Pssst Pluto we think you're rad in Sekrit Club. You should join.
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>>28123715
delet this
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>>28123715
pure qm donut go
>>
>>28123635
>>28123630
>>28123626
>>28123663
>>28123678
>>28123694
"Harder you wimp!" You snap, "It's not *unf* fucking glass!
Nit Pick obliges and shoves his face into your cunt; making you gasp and moan louder.
"Please don't brutally rape!" You suddenly shout out.
Nit Pick looks up at you with confusion but, quickly gets back to work.
You find yourself moaning louder and louder; soon, you climax; shouting Nit Pick's name. Your vision goes white for a few seconds. When you regain it; Nit Pick is standing above you; mare cum on his face and his dick above you pussy.
"Ready for round two?" He asks you with a smirk.

What do you do?

Last post for this thread. I'm just gonna wait for this to be archived before continuing. I shall return today with a new thread!

>>28123715
Thanks for the offer but, I already have a club. It's all these anons that are playing my story. You guys have been awesome by the way. I shall return later today!
>>
>>28123769
The two clubs are not mutually exclusive, nig.
>>
>>28123769
"Oh no, mister steel ranger! Don't shove your rocket launcher up my little pussy!"
>>
>>28123769
Heh,heh. Yeah, now stick it in already, and don't finish inside!
>>
>>28123769
>implying
despite the memes sekrit is helpful for new cyoas bud, it wasn't a social call.
scream hard rapeee
>>
>>28123769
Please tell me we got our cutie mark.
>>
>>28123797
It was a social call.
>>
>>28123769
Gimme it before I TAKE it!
>>
>>28123769
When he gets close to cumming make sure he pulls out and cums on our face instead.
>>
>>28123769
>Ready for round two?
No! Please not again mister raider! Wait, why are you stopping? That means yes, dumbshit.
>>
>>28123813
Right. Can't get pregnant after all.
>>
>>28123797
he doesn't need the help though.
>>
Let him go at it, let him almost finish inside, then grab his flank with magic and hold him in until the last moment. Think about just what it would feel like, then pull him out. If we can't have the full deal we'll have as close as we can get.
>>
don't cum inside.
>>
>>28123866
Combine this with the cumming on our face and you've got a deal.
>>
>>28123903
Let's just let him cum in our mouth instead.
Easier to get rid of the evidence.
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>>28123914
He tries to cum in our mouth, splatters it all over our face, and we walk around with a half-facial.
>>
>>28123914
That sounds very reasonable and not at all like a filthy mare who wants to be covered in it.
>>
>>28123930
We're not like that, though
>>
>>28123969
HYEBRTQ?
>>
>>28123969
u wot
>>
>>28123930
>>28123969
But it also sounds like a slutty mare semen demon who wants to gobble a ton of jizz, as she gets gagged by stallion dick.
>>
>>28123994
Nah. Outside and whatever she can catch in her mouth is dirtier.
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>>28123994
>>28124015
It's not like she can't clean his cock deeply afterwards.
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>>28124015
Can he still gag us with his cock?
>>
>>28124030
If he's got the balls to do it sure :^)
>>
inb4 Our Dad walks in on us and tries to take Nit Pick away, but then we hold Nit hostage with our clever, and he continues to fuck us in front our dad.
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>>28124303
That won't work he'd want Nit dead.
>>
dedu
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>>28123769
tell him you're ready for three rounds
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