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This one's called the ugly pony.
>Once there was a pony that was so ugly, that everyone died
The end

>>27932562
omg so good, please continue ^_^

>>27932562
>"Shh- Look, check out who it is!"
>"Oh my god, guys look at this!"
>You can hear the crowd's murmurs and snickering as you walk by.
>"Haha--shh shh, don-don't say anything...."
>This isn't the first time, in fact, this happens every-god-damn-day.
"Is there a problem?"
>A witty phrase? You got this in the bag.
>"Yeah, haha- your face!" The crowd goes wild
>Holy shit that hurt. But you set yourself up for it, no one to blame but you.
>"HAHA! Good one, bro!"
>"Ha, thanks!"
"That was so lame, get a new joke"
>"You are the new joke!" The crowd goes insane with laughter, it makes you feel like shit.
>Damn it, twice in a row.
>All you wanted to do was go for a walk
"Fuck you guys, I'm leaving."
>"Whatever, genetics already fucked you." The crowd spasms in laughter, now what seems like 14 or so people gather around.
"This is such bullshit, I'll get them back for it, just watch."
>"Ain't nobody wanna watch you..." More people start laughing hysterically
>That's it, either you're going to kill them or yourself, and it happens tonight.

>>27932562
>but trixie resurect all pony as zombie, the crossover start. trixie spawn equestria girl with some weapons, gear, and tacos.the rules are simple, only shoot ears and noise. pony -ombies cant smell the world and ear what happen. what a fucking good strat ! but equestria fluttershy hit all other equestria pony with a shoot error. sorry.

>>27932663
Is that even English?

>>27932675
its beginner writefags, i do what i want, fag

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>>27932537
Beginner writefaggot taking requests. Something reasonable. I make good amateur stories, but character development was never my focus in those.

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>You are Dark Flame, the edgiest alicorn to ever exist
>You are going to take revenge on Celestia and Luna just because[citation needed]
>You are in the middle of Ponyville
"Watch as I destroy everything you hold dear!"
>A mighty red beam shoots out of your horn and hits the town below you
>Ponyville is turned into a crater instantly.
>The explosion hits you, and you die.

THE END
Kill me now

>>27933915
Rape prank in ponyville (GONE WRONG) (GONE SEXUAL)

>>27933929
You stole this from another fanfic!!!
REPORTED!

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>>27933934
>Be Anon
>You appeared in Ponyville sometime ago, god knows how long it's been
>You never actually considered it
>You think that it has to have been a couple of years now?
>You brush the thought off and go about your day
>Because today you had something special in store
>You never grew attached to most of the ponies, except for a few. Namely the princesses, who met with you rather quickly when you first arrived. Maybe also Rarity, but that was only because she shared the same disdain for the other ponies as you
>Okay, maybe a little more, but the point is, as a result of your lack of attachment, you find yourself playing pranks on the ponies all the time
>Harmless little things, like sneaking into one of their homes and moving all their furniture by a couple of inches and then hiding outside to watch
>Moving the books in Twilight's library out of alphabetical order and hiding one of Pinkie's confetti poppers behind it to pop when she tries to replace the book
>Or that time you swapped Spike's gem stash with some Legos that came with you when you arrived, but he ate them anyways.
>Today you felt like doing something special
>Today, you were going to take your camera that you had when you arrived and record some funny things.
>How does a rape prank sound?

A man willing to expend more effort than I is required to make that topic into anything other than shitpost tier.

I tried.

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Disclaimer: bad english + complete beginner writefag

>Once there was a pony that had a huge cock.
>Hopefully, he can make his cock invisible with his magic.
>*bom*
>"What was that ?" asks an other pony who was slapped by the invisible huge cock.
>No one notices the reality of facts
>Huge cock pony came back home.
"Ooooh, I slapped so much people today ! Damn it ! The hospitall is full. Again..."
>Huge cock pony uses his magic to unhide his huge cock.
>Lay down in the sofa.
>"Oh ! It's huge !"
"Wait. Who's here !?"
>Female pony appears.
>"Look. We're same !"
>Female pony unhide her huge boobs.
>Huge cock pony got boobslapped.

>>27934800
This makes the greentext about the rape prank seem like Shakespeare

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>>27934812
I did my best...

With training I'll be able to write better stories, I hope.

One of my few attempts at writefagging. Feel free to r8.

>”I can’t believe I’m doing this.”
>the blue mare exclaims staring straight at your crotch with a peeved expression
>you pull down your underwear and your dick springs out nearly hitting Dash in the face
>her cheek feels good on your length
>must be the fur
>A little bristly but not uncomfortable
>it’s quite soft
>she gives a sidelong glance at your penis and wrinkles her nose at the sight of it
> it can’t be the smell, you’ve always been good with personal hygiene
>sighing, she musters up what little enthusiasm she has
>she moves her head back dragging her cheek along your length and begins the task at hand
>eyes shut tight, brows furrowed, she reluctantly rubs her lips across your tip, shaking her head from side to side
> your pre smears her lips
>as soon as she feels it she puckers them, fighting to keep your pre from getting inside her mouth
> a vain attempt really considering she has to give you a blowjob and swallow your cum as per the deal she agreed on if she lost.
>unfortunately for her it does leak into her mouth
> wincing, she groans slightly at the taste
>“Eeaugh…”
>rude :^(
>she’s really got to get over her revulsion towards humans
>that or she needs to stop making stupid bets
“ Well?, We doing this or not?”
>letting out a horselike snort she glares up at you
>“I’m getting to it okay?!”
>looking from you to your dick her frown deepens
>steeling her resolve she takes a deep breath, closes her eyes and thrusts her lips around your tip
> ears flattened, she scrunches her nose and closes her eyes as she swirls her warm wet tongue around the head of your dick
>when she starts sucking you fail to suppress a groan
>taking this as a good sign she swirls her tongue a bit faster
>and…. that’s about it
>looks like this is all she’s willing to do for you
> you reach out and try running your fingers through her mane

>>27934866
>as soon as she feels you she bats your hand away with her hoof and grunts in frustration
“Fine, jeeze.”
>she’s still sucking away at your tip
>fuck girl, how about a little variety
>at this rate you’re going to be here forever
>not that this would be a bad thing
“Look, Dash.”
>she doesn’t acknowledge you, concentrating on being anywhere but here at the moment
“ You’re going to have to do more than that if you want this to be over with any faster.”
>she pauses
>that got her attention
>With your tip still wrapped firmly in her mouth she looks up at you
“Listen, just think of it as this way, the better you are at pleasing me the sooner you’ll be done with me. This will all be over before you know it.”
>she deflates a little letting what your words sink in
>good, maybe you got through to her
>looking as though she’s made a decision, Dash closes her eyes and bobs her head along your length
>that’s better
>the sounds of her wet suckling fill the room as she takes more of you into her mouth
>she’s not stupid, she knows how to do this
>you can feel her tongue caress your shaft
>she occasionally laps at your tip, unintentionally tasting the pre leaking from you
>she gags a little
>and that disgusted look on her face is back
>oh well, you guess it can’t be helped
>she’s gotten to about half your length before pulling back up
>you can tell she’s forcing herself to keep going
>you groan and you tell her to go faster
>she whimpers into your cock but complies
>yeah, she knows she still has to swallow your cum
>despite your unwilling participant it feels so damn good
>you can feel the building pressure within your loins
“Remember, the quicker you are, the sooner it’ll be over.”
>she pulls her mouth off of you
>she’s trying to spit out all the pre that’s accumulated in her mouth
>fuck she must really hate precum
>that or she’s not willing to swallow anything she doesn’t have to

>>27934866
You stole this from banned from equestria, didn't you?

>>27934876
>she should’ve just swallowed because it just sort of drooling out of her mouth and down onto her chest
>she spits a couple more times until she gets as much out of her mouth as she can
>she glances worriedly at your pulsating member
>it’s slippery from all the spit
>she’s dreading what’s about to come
>if you want to keep this up you figure you’ll just have to coach her through this
“Final stretch Rainbow, just a little bit more and you’re home free.”
>Dash rolls her eyes at you
>”Gee, thanks for the pep talk, Anon.”
>she says sarcastically
>she gets ready to put you back in her mouth before she gets an idea
> she reels her head back and awkwardly starts jerking you off with her hooves, looking anywhere except your cock
>her hooves are soft, admittedly not what you expected
>must be all that flying she does, you hardly ever see her on the ground
>you cock slips out from between her hooves from time to time
>must be hard to get a good grip with hooves
> Dash curses eavry time this happens
>”Aw shoot…”
>”Ponyfeathers.”
>”Buck!”
>well, cursing by Equestrian standards
>you try to stifle your laughter
>”Just shut up. It’s not funny.” she grumbles
>finally getting the hang of it she takes a third of your length back into her mouth while she continues to stroke you with her hooves
>you groan in approval
>you’re getting close now
>she’s bobbing and stroking you faster
>she’s investing her energy into speed, quickening her pace
>damn her mouth is so warm
>you’re involuntarily thrusting your hips into her muzzle
“Get ready Dashie.” you grunt
>this is the part that she’s been dreading
>putting everything out of her mind she redoubles her efforts
>you can feel yourself pulsating inside her hot mouth
>you grab the sides of her head to help her along

>>27934890
Nah, I posted this in the casual sex threads a long time ago.

>you can’t tell if it’s you making her bob her head so fast or if your arms are just along for the ride
>the pressure finally becomes too much for you to handle
>you reach your limit and shoot your load into that smartass mouth of hers
>she lets out a displeased groan that sends vibrations onto your cock as you coat her mouth with your hot sticky seed
“FFFffffuuuuuck….”
>as soon as she feels you unload she grunts and tightens her lips around your member making sure she doesn’t miss a drop
>so tight
>her tongue can’t escape the torrent of sperm flooding her mouth
>her face scrunches in displeasure
> sucking hard, she tries to coax as much of your seed out of you as she can
>she wouldn’t want to have to do this all over again because she let some spill
>your cock continues to throb and she continues to suck
>you two stay like that for a whole five minutes with your hands tangled in her mane
>Dash makes no effort to push your hands away
>she’s too busy trying to suppress her gag reflex
>you let go and just lay there, allowing her to milk you with her sucking
>when she can’t feel you throbbing anymore she slowly slides her mouth off of your length
>as she reaches the end she pulls off of your length making a slight pop sound
>cheeks full your spunk, tears welling up in her face, and eyes screwed shut
>what a wonderful sight
>you sit there amused at how she struggles to swallow what you’ve given her
>”Mmmph….ulm.”
“Don’t think about it, just swallow.”
>you say impatiently.
> she gives you a look that would shrivel your balls if you hadn’t just emptied them into her gullet
>she lifts her head up, looking up at the ceiling to concentrate
>you watch as your spunk travels down her throat to its final destination
>”Ulp ulp ulp…mph…ulp…ulp.”
>after downing the last of it she looks down and lets out a huge breath
>”Haaahhhh.”

>>27934898
>you pull up your pants and move to congratulate her but she holds out her foreleg signaling for you to stop
>she hangs her head to the side and retches, her mouth open and her tongue hanging out
>She finally regains her composure
>“I….hate….cum.” she utters
“Bring breath mints next time.”
>she scoffs and wipes her mouth
>”Ugh, there won’t be a next time monkey boy, and don’t get any funny ideas about you and me. This was strictly for the bet, and Dash isn’t going to back off because she has to suck your gross primate wang!”
>yeah whatever, judging from the way this turned out ponies are going to be making her do this a lot more often
>not that you mind, you love watching her squirm
“Heh primate, that’s a big word for you. And cut the third person shit out, you sound like Trixie when you do that.”
> you reach for a pack of gum you’ve been keeping in your pocket
>she notices you taking it out
>”Hey…Anon, give me some of that.”
“No.”
>you say nonchalantly as you unwrap a piece for yourself
> Dash trots toward you
>”Seriously Anon give it to me, I don’t want you being the only thing I taste for the rest of the day.”
“Nope.”
>you ignore her, putting more pieces of gum in your mouth
>Dash flies up to you and stares you down
>”Anon, you’d better give me that gum right now or I swear to Celestia I’m going to buck you into next week!”
[shit eating grin intensifies]
“You did that, like just now.”
>”NOT WHAT I MEANT, JERK!”
>Rainbow chases you around the house and you sidestep each of her attempts at tackling you
> “DANG IT ANON!”
>you laugh as you run from her all while stuffing the whole packet of gum into your mouth, wrapper and all
>you’ll be damned if you’re going to let Rain-blow have a piece of your gum

End

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>>27934851
>Huge cock pony uses his magic to unhide his huge cock.

It's not your skill that sucks, it's your execution and premise. Bro, that's a shitpost.

>>27934908
I know it's shit, but it's a thread for beginners, so I tried.

Btw, it's even more difficult for me since I'm not english. Maybe I should write a story in advance and then translate it properly. I also need to read moar stories from master writefags to get it well.

Anyway, thanks for your advice. I'll work on it !

Bump for all you beginners out there

>>27934908
>It's not your skill that sucks, it's your execution and premise
Not that guy but what's the difference? don't be a cunt

Amatur faggot here; hit me up boi

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/338253/beneath-the-suns-surface

>>27937156
>>27934113
>Rape prank in ponyville (GONE WRONG) (GONE SEXUAL)
Finish what he started.

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>>27937198
*cracks knuckles*

>Pinkie Pie bounced her way down one of the dimly lit side streets of Ponyville, the sun just having set behind the hills in the distance
>It was time to return home from a long day of cooking pastries at Suger Cube Corner
>As she moved past an alley, a whistle caught her attention, the pink pony turning back around as she peered down the alley, her eyes meeting with those of a well-known out of towner; some strange bipedal creature that called itself a 'human'. It seemed to get along with everyone just fine
"Whoa, hey, Anon! Whatcha doin' back here with your camera thingy? OOH! ARE YOU MAKING A MOVIE?"
>The Pink pony came further into the alley, her innocent eyes still showing excitement
>the Bipedal creature suddenly slashed its fist across Pinkie's face, knocking her to the ground with a grunt
>just as quick as it had happened; the human leapt atop Pinkie's dazed body
>The human's fully erect dick flopped from its pants upon undoing a zipper; one hand holding Pinkie's neck and the other holding the camera as the human began thrusting into her tight anus
>Pinkie could only respond with frightened sounds, her protests eventually turning to screams and cries from the pain of having her virgin hole penetrated
>The human's thrusts slowed, a sudden warm feeling seeping into Pinkie's ass as the human ejaculated
>After finishing, the human got to its feet and zipped up its pants, standing for a moment to record the tear-soaked face of Pinkie as she looked at the camera
>Before she could say a word, the human sprinted out of the alleyway with a shout
"IT'S JUST A PRANK BRO"

Never done anything related to clop, so this was very much a first time.

>pony #53 like hyooman very much
>hyooman like pony too
>they fug like doogs
FIN

>>27937797
OP here of the first part. Bravo. I didn't know where to go, or how I'd set it up. Looks like I was just overthinking.
P.S.
I kek'd

>>27937836
DAYUM

>>27932537
>"Haha, you faggot can't even stand a hit from a girl! What you gonna do now, fuckboy? Cry?! Fucking nerd!"
>You are Anon
>And your currently clutching your balls, on the ground, with tears streaming out of your eyes
>"R-Rainbow Dash, that wasn't very nice of you..."
>"Who cares, Fluttershy? Anon is a pussy anyway, he doesn't talk to anyone."
>It's been like this all fucking year
>Just because you usually keep to yourself, this ousted you as a target for the class dyke, Rainbow Dash
>Today as you were walking to your car, she walked up to you and kicked you in the dick
>With her Captain-Of-The-Soccer-Team legs
>In a flash you were on the ground, and Rainbow and her friends were watching you on the ground
>Applejack holds a stern facade, but its clear shes trying not to laugh aswell
>"Rainbow, Ah think we shoul' leave Anon alone, he gets enough guff from ya."
>Rainbow looks at her, and then back to you before shrugging
>"Alright AJ, he can have a break today"
>With that the rest of her friends leave
>Except for Fluttershy, who walks over and helps you to your feet.
>"I'm sorry Anon, I know Rainbow can be rude sometimes, but please don't take anything by it."
>Don't take anything by it?
>You hear the same thing every single day from a different one of the group, mostly Fluttershy, who seems to honestly care, but still doesn't stand up for you against Dash
>None of them do

continue y/n?

>>27938304
no, it's shit so far and worse than the previous stories

>>27938304
Threads about dead, but If no one else will, I'll read it. Just don't make Anon yell at Fluttershy without making sure she accepts his apology.

>>27932630
how about you kill them AND yourself?

>>27932537
I made a couple of stories, but i don't know what to post
I'll sleep now. If tomorrow this is up, i'll give you to choice what i show

Bump for new writefags

>>27932537
K

>Be anon
>Pinkie Pie called you over to her house for some reason.
>She was too busy taking gasps of air for you to hear what she said after that.
>So you walked over, since you live so close anyways.
"Hey Ponk? You here?"
>The room was quiet, until you heard a scream coming up from her room
"What in the hell was that?"
>You had to see this, obviously something was going on.
>As you came closer to the door, you heard panting and a noise someone makes when they jump.
"Uhh, Pinkie? I'm coming in!"
>As you go in you see something that you've never seen in this world before.
>It looked so werid for where you were, but then you realized what was happening.
>So you ran over and shouted.
"LISTEN YOU PINK AND GREEDY SON OF A BITCH. YOU NEED TO PUSH!"
>"PUSH!"
"YOU'RE DOING IT!"
>"PUSH!!"
"ONE MORE TIME!"
>"PUSH!!!"
>Finally, the pushing ceased as the celebrating of the people filled your ears...
>Wait for it...
>Wait...
>...
>The alaskan bull worm fell on bikini bottom! Fuck yeah!
"Holy shit! That always gets me!"
>Then the spongebob episode ended.
>"See anon? That's why I wanted you to come over! You dropped that circle thing with the big square thing and I put them into each other! And that came up!"
>You introduced the golden days of spongebob to an impressionable race.
>/co/ and /mlp/ have joined on this day.

It was bright.
Painfully bright on that. As a reflex, you've tried to cover your eyes only to realize you can't actually do it.
It could’ve scared you, if it weren’t for the mass of greenish something to hit you in your face interrupting all thought processes.
That hurts!
After the initial shock goes away, you try to lift yourself up.
Surprisingly, you succeed.
Spitting some hopefully grass and even more hopefully dirt, you manage to get yourself into sitting position.
You look around.
Too bright. Too much green. You are not used to that.
You try to focus on something, but fail to do so.
You head is full of thoughts but you can’t concentrate on any of them.
“Look out!” and then one person saves another from a car accident, only to become a victim instead.
“Go without me” and then they leave someone behind.
“Where’s my lube?”
Well, that one was unexpected.
Scenes and stories in your head formed an absurd mix of something you can’t understand anymore.
Which of them are your memories?
Which are not?
You feel like something terrible just happened but you keep forgetting about it.
And yet, a moment passes and your thoughts tell you that your final moments were as peaceful as possible.
“Final moments”
You catch yourself on that.
-Did I die?
Hearing unfamiliar voice startles you for a moment.
Wait a second. That’s your voice. How hard did you hit your head?
Well, whatever. Back to the important question.
Are you dead?

>>27941653
You try to sort your memories to answer that question.
You find no answer.
Well, you find two of them, actually.
“Yes” and “No”
Thank you, feeling much better now.
-The hell is this…
Thinking is hard.
You can’t remember who are you, what are you, what happened, what are you doing here and who the hell these multihued animals are.
-Nah, that’s easy – these are horses.
-Ponies, actually, - gray one answers you.
Somehow you manage to get a grip on yourself and not start screaming.
What the hell. Who’s that?
-Get back here! - you hear a voice with quite a lot of tension
Gray one nods and trots away.
Ponies? What? Who? Where?
Yes. Animals. Still animals. Here apparently.
After answering yourself a bunch of questions, you feel better for a moment.
-A god forsaken horse just spoke to me…
Just for a moment.
You look at colorful bunch clearly talking to each other.
Yep, these are horses. No mistake here.
Either that or aliens, given their huge eyes.
Probably, sticking with the aliens version would be better for your mental health.
Yet, you caught yourself on a thought – you are not as surprised as you should be.
There’s something familiar. You can’t say what exactly.
-Do I know you?
You speak too silent for anyone to hear, but ponies nervously turn their heads in your direction.
Standing like ten steps away from you, they are whispering to each other.

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>>27941653

>>27941662
You can’t hear what they are saying.
You can’t get rid of that annoying feeling.
Purple. Yellow. Orange.
“That last one should be standing more to the background” you chuckle a bit.
Why though?
White. Blue. “Top…” and you stop as you feel that joke won’t be funny.
Gray one has left, as it seems.
-Alright, girls. Let’s…
Someone’s missing. As soon as that thought hits you, devilish scream hits your eardrums,
-SWEET CELESTIA!
Oh god. That was loud.
-How could’ve I missed it?! – if a form of a pink storm, a new pony comes out.
-Pinkie? – purple one looks confused.
-It’s a friend, a friend.
-You know him?
-Nope – says the pink one as she passes other ponies and heads straight to you.
Smiling at that.
-Why didn’t you tell me you were coming?
No.
-I’ve been preparing your welcome party, but I never knew you would come that early! – she stops in front of you.
Don’t.
-It’s a bummer, really. I planned that to be a big event!
Stop that.
-Oh, wait. Silly me! It WILL be a big event!
There’s a weird buzzing in your ears.
-Today we’ll throw you a surprise welcome party! And then when I’ll finish with the actual one…
This isn’t buzzing. It’s a tune.
-Wait a second. It would not be a surprise party, when I just told you about it!

>>27941677
There’s music playing in your head.
-Then, it will be a party for your surprise!
There shouldn’t be any music, but there is.
-That sounds stupid, if you think about that. Ah, whatever – we can fix the name later.
Ah.
That’s right.
Now you understand.
This music that’s playing in your head.
This stupid horse talking nonsense.
All other stupid horses.
You know them.
You know them for a long time already.
Your hands tremble as you slowly rise them.
-Are you okay? – pink one looks concerned.
It’s hard to move, but your hands continue rising.
-Wait.
Slowly you touch her mane, as she seems to be frozen in place.
-Don’t do it.
Your hands dig into puffy fur.
-You know I don’t like it.
Your fingers touch her soft and warm neck.
-Please… - tears appear in her eyes.
With last bits of your strength, you lock your arms.
Soft fur wraps your face.
You feel her tears falling on your shoulder.
With your face buried in pink fur.
You were hugging a pink pony and crying together.

any tips in how to develop a good conversation ?

>>27941709
Try talking to yourself or a friend. You know like roleplaying

>be anon
>have muscles and large dong
>be in equestria
>pink pony hops down the street happy and giggling
>she does a twirl, a backflip and lands herself directly on your dick
>sex
>cum
>you cum fire her off your dick into the street where she is hit by a car
>dead instantly
>soon u fond out that semen is corrosive in horse land
>begin spraying all over
>ponies scream in horror as your cum melts their skulls
>nothing else interesting happens

the end

I don't think they understand the concept.

>>27942118
S-so lewd.

>>27941709
Step one, don't put said/says after every sentence. People already know someone is talking, so there is no need for it.

Step two, make it obvious when someone else is speaking. Like having ponies speak in green, but anon speak without green.

>>27941653
>>27941709
Please, god, learn what quotation marks are.
Please
It hurts.
Other than that, that was a really strong opening. Loved it.
Oh yeah? and you'd fit in better if you used
>
to make text green
>Like this
>Implying you aren't bait

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>>27932537

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>>27942118

>>27941709
I agree with >>27944180, but don't be afraid to write down change in tone and social cues.

>>27933934
(IN THA HOOD)

http://pastebin.com/LWhxrF3B

If anyone cares im a beginner writefag and I'm looking for some critique on this lewd green I wrote.

I wrote it on the stop a few days ago so don't expect it to be amazing.

Don't be gentle I c-can take it.

>>27938605
busy day, but i'm here.
so far i got:
1 EqG green
3 anon greens
1 canon green
1 country ponies green
1 BG pony green (noi)
1 TFH green
please choose one, i'll repost it, and i'm open for critics

Hello, sort of a beginner writefag here.
I would like to get your guys input on my green here. >>27943444
It's about being a POW in YakYakistan.

>>27932537
I don't really know what to Pone about. I haven't written anything in awhile, so here goes basically nothing and a half.
>Normal Everyday Pone.
I flipped over on my belly, the sun was burning intently above me. Leaving the skin across my body pink and blistered. I lay lounging on the Fertile ground, weaving my hooves between the grasses that lay around me.
Ever since the sun rose, I have laid, imbedding myself into this meadow. Slowly drifting off into the endless embodiment of sleep. Counting the single cells of my brain that have yet to melt in the summer heat.
As I boil I feel the layers and layers of warm bright waves grasp ahold of me. Making to caress my bleeding pores. For hours I have laid, the sun shines ever long out of the bounds of my reach.
Slowly, the echoing drone of a silent consciousness rings through my ears as it dies. Emptying the carcass left the rot into the soil.
The stench from this stew of meat and fluids reached the nostrils of passerby, sickening each and everyone of them, seemingly adding to the recipe. The frenzy of waste staring to pool in the surrounding field drew attention of many and brought about a proper disposal.
Dotted lines of beaten pulp lay burning in the rays of the heavens.

>Excuse The Angst.

I would like to link the Writefags Guild >>27919044. They're specialised in critiquing greens.

>>27944324
Thank you, anon. I needed that.