FimFiction thread - Now with 60% plus Canadiens

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>>27678042
I practice writing by creating short greentexts to reply to shitposts.

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>>27678086
We're off to a great start.

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F-futaloo get?

Futa Belle get.

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>>27678388
I think we should take what we can.

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found this little gem

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/272451/anon-goes-to-prison

strange how i never came across it before seeing how popular it is, and the author's bad story list he displays on his profile is pretty lulzy

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>>27678388
What the actual fuck.

>>27678969
Indeed. Why does everyone feel the need to stick a dick on a female, yet no one ever gives a male a cunt

>>27679046
vaginas are gayer then cock

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FUCK YOU FAGLORDS INDIGO IS GOOD AND I HATE YOU LEMON POSTERS SHITTING UP MY THREAD WITH YOU "YUR WAIFU A SHIT" BULLSHIT MAYMAY FUCK!!! FUCK BACK OFF TO WHATEVER CANCER THREAD YOU CRAWLED OUT OF AND STAY THERE WITH YOUR "I WANNA CUM INSIDE RAINBOW DASH" AND "FIND A FLAW" BULLSHITTERY!! RECYCLED MEMES EVERY DAMN DAY AND ALL I WANTED WAS A DECENT INDIGO THREAD FUUUCCKKK OFFFFF

>>27679215
wrong tab?

>>27679217
>>27677371

>>27679261
I still hope it was just the wrong tab and not a shitty newfag meme.

>>27679269
Apparently Zestfags were spamming the Indigofags with their waifu, hence anon being mad.

Wh... who is Indigo?

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>>27679460
This bitch from EQG

>>27679460
Shitty EqG secondary character who had like 10 minutes of screentime total.

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>>27679474
Her fans are in war with pic related's fans

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>>27679480
We are..?

I want EqG waifufags with pig disgusting waifus to leave and take their shit memes with them.

>>27679490
Well, it seems, according to their posts.

>>27679480
>>27679474
These are some background characters from the latest movie? Because honestly, if you told me they were OCs I would believe you

>>27679497
Secondary plot devices with literally zero actual impact.

>frogposts
>writes in all caps
>likes eqg
Why am I not surprised?

>>27679474
>>27679490
those are both pretty shit looking waifus

>>27679766
Still better than /swg/

Home of toilet pone.

>>27679937
*/swt/

>>27679976
I don't know what that is and I'm not sure I want to know.

>>27679996
>>27559734

If you wanted to wash your eyes with bleach, might as well see it before.

>>27680005
I've seen that thread before.
It has literally nothing of value. It's all just circlejerking with barely any content to speak of.

>>27679937
at least 'toilet pone' whatever that may be sounds like it could have a purpose.

So I'm just going to have to assume toilet pone is still better than a discount lightning dust and the one that looks like a sprite spokesperson

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Seeing this kind of stuff makes me relate with Autismo. Every time I check my feed I find stuff like this.

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>>27680221
Still waiting for quads.

But seriously, it happens because I'm mostly (not) writing, and almost never go on Fimfic due to the pure amount of autism.

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>>27680271
>I'm mostly (not) writing
How dare you say that to me.

>>27680284
Y tu, anon, y tu?

Do you write?

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>>27680271
>because I'm mostly (not) writing
WHERE'S MY FIRST FUCKING CHAPTER OF NH YOU FUCKING LAZY FAGGOT

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>>27680294
In my NH folder

I'm just trying to get myself to finish a one-shot just to know what Fimfic would think of my style. Seeing how they react to the utter shit I've seen, I think they might like it.

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>>27680293
>Do you write?
As a matter of fact, I do.
Jury's still out on the quality.

>>27680294
Also, this.

>>27680305
Where do you see those stats?

>>27680305
still way too many characters. stick to a handful of characters and maybe 20 more as a supporting cast. youre no shinkazura, so writing 12000 characters isnt for you

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>>27680314
Shift+Ctrl+C, brah.

>>27680338
You know, one would think that'd stop being funny, but I still laugh when you say that.

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>>27680353
Oh, thought it was on Fimfic.

And the prologue still isn't complete, although I'm not doing it entirely in a linear way.

>>27680353
oh

The write stuff

>>27681476
You got the write stuff, baby
Love the way you write pony porn
You got the write stuff, baby
You're the reason why I clop at all

Chink Chink Chink

New Rainbow Dash Presents just came out.
Does anyone watch these? Are the fics they're presenting worth reading?

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/33145/my-little-pony-quickbolt
Just leaving this here. I hoped on it while perusing the lowest rated stories. Not sure what to say, really.

>>27682805
>Does anyone watch these?
Yeah. I tend to like them.

>Are the fics they're presenting worth reading?
Generally no. I don't know about this last one though, it seems like it might be decent.

>>27682911
I wonder what fic has the highest dislikes-minus-likes value? I'd run a script to parse through the archive's JSON, but I'm busy downloaded the latest version of the archive and my CPU is busy doing research stuff.

>>27683014
I want to know so that I may read it.

You lazy bastards-

>>27682805

I watch them, and I've read all the stories.

Bubbles wasn't bad, Haunting Nightmare, Rainbow Factory, and MLD are not worth reading, Spiderses is a trollfic, and Star in Yellow is legit good.

>>27684396
I mean, who still hasn't read Rainbow Factory, MLD or Cupcakes in this day and age.

>>27684396
Me.

They just don't appeal at all, so I don't see why I should waste my time on them.

>>27684477
Did you join in like 2015?
They all used to be a HUGE deal.

>>27684405
I actually never read MLD. It had humans in it, so I wasn't interested.
I almost dropped Anthropology too when it stopped being about Ponyland, but I figured that I was so invested that I might as well just finish it.
I read so many fics back then. Now I read almost nothing. I probably should.

>>27684405
I still haven't read Rainbow Factory, but I did see the Rainbow Dash presents.

Curiously enough, I read cupcakes way before I even knew about pony.

Can we post about shit fics we have read?

For some reason, that I cannot properly remember, I was huge into Vinyl ScratchxOctavia at some point. I suspect Allegrezza and The Vinyl Scratch Tapes were to blame. 2012 was a wild time, and the two had already been one of the fandom's definitive ships for a year.

Long story short, I ended up reading Two's Company, Three's a Crowd. For longer than I'd care to admit.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2060/twos-company-threes-a-crowd
>it's still fucking incomplete
>it's still being fucking updated
Now, I don't think I've touched it since maybe 2012, but still. It's more contrived lesbian babydrama than I should ever have set out to read in the first place.

>>27684629
I've read Cupcakes before even watching the show.
Then My Little Dashie. The ending made me cry.
Then I just started reading random stuff. I've mostly read decent stuff, though, oddly enough. The most autistic ones were Rorschach in Equestria (though I remember it being fairly well written) and a shitty Polish fanfic about a human and humanized Fluttershy meeting each other in a coma. Its name was Koma.
And now I'm stuck in the Persona EG hell.

Reading Fallout Equestria when it was still incomplete has dramatically improved my English proficiency. I don't think I'd be nearly as fluent as I am now without it. Not that I'm suddenly a walking thesaurus, of course.

>>27684495
Well, as huge as they were, the synopsis really didn't interest me that much. I wasn't at all into humans or gore in MLP, so I didn't bother.

Are they worth the read though?

>>27684797
Not at all. But most people have.
I guess you can try MLD. It's pretty controversial on /mlp/ (or used to be on the /mlp/ I knew), but I think it has 11808 likes on fimfiction, so obviously it did something right.

>>27684826
MLD is effective as a feelsy fic, but not necessarily a good one.
The feels are there, but they're written as they're purposefully crafted to pull at your heartstrings. Rob Cakeran said once that he ignored certain logic holes just for the purpose of telling the story.
Plus it's one of the earliest fanfics of the fandom, so there's that.

>>27684826
Past Sins also has over 10k likes, so does FOE

>>27684964
FoE has 7k, since it was uploaded long after being finished

>>27684826
I really don't get feels fics, so I guess I'm staying out.

I really don't know why though. Might be because I'm diagnosed with Aspergers, but I never really felt any emotion relative to a fictional characters other than extremely light sympathy.

>>27684990
>I really don't know why though. Might be because I'm diagnosed with Aspergers
I guess it will forever remain a mystery.

>>27684978
My bad then, bad memory.

>>27684990
You have a lack of empathy
Sorry bud, some people with Asperger's can develop feelings and emotions so there's hope for you yet.

>>27685069
I do have some, but for like two people, none of which are in my family, and even then it's extremely superficial.

Well, what do you expect anyways from anyone on 4chan?

>>27684990
>Might be because I'm diagnosed with Aspergers
Nah, it's probably just because your parents didn't love you.

>>27685133
>Well, what do you expect anyways from anyone on 4chan?
Normal people. The large majority of 4chan's users are completely normal in all or most significant ways.

>>27685164
I know why I lost hope in normal people now then.

>>27685151
>Nah, it's probably just because your parents didn't love you.
You've got it mixed up. It's a well known medical fact that mothers not loving their children enough is the main cause of autism.

>>27685202
Well, I did almost suffocate at birth, so much that the doctors hooked me up on an oxygen bag asap.

And my nun did drop me headfirst on a concrete surface at 5 months.

>>27685218
Jeesh, sorry hear that, man.

Funny, not so funny story, shortly after I was born there was a cholera outbreakat the nursery room that killed seven babies because some of the nurses didn't properly disinfect some bottles. I was going to be number eight, but by that point the doctors got their heads out of their butts and revived me.

>>27685218
Nuns are known to do that. Around the clergy, beware.

>>27685256
What kind of third world country do you live in? Poland?

>>27685218
post-natal abortions have a sadly low success rate.

>>27685432
Perú, actually.

Additional fun fact. The reason the nurses forgot to properly disinfect the baby bottles was because they'd been celebrating too hard for Mother's Day, which was around that same week I was born.

I think I must have been around three days old or so.

>>27685218
>And my nun did drop me headfirst on a concrete surface at 5 months.
Ah, the old "One morning and five months after pill".

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>>27680221
>being a member of the general shipping group
Why? Why wouldn't you join a group specifically about a ship you like? That way the autism and shitty stories are at least contained to characters you enjoy.

>>27684405
I still haven't read Cupcakes. Considering it's original point was to horrifically subvert SoL PinkieDash, it has long since lost what little impact it wold have had on me.

>>27684797
>Are they worth the read though?
MLD is a solid 4/10. I read it back at it's peak and I couldn't help but think "Thank god Dash is back in Equestria and the Elements aren't fucked up anymore." No feels were had, but I wasn't a Dashfag.

From what little I remember of Bubbles, it was a 7/10 oneshot. Worth the read.

Fimfiction tell some I've read Haunting Nightmare but I have absolutely no recollection of it, which means it was literally forgettable.

Rainbow Factory could have done some great things with its premise, but fucked it up to have a shitty grimdark ending. The sequel was much better but still fucked up the ending.

Spidersis was pretending to be retarded, so I didn't enjoy it as much as a real shit story would be.

Star in Yellow was an 8/10. Also well worth a read. No idea why it's being parodied.

>>27686858
>No idea why it's being parodied
Not like only bad things can get parodies.

>>27687368
This.
Besides, RDP has always been a platform for poking fun at FiM's characters and tone, which you can do regardless of what story you're telling.

hi, anybody can recommend me some anon in equestria romance like My Special Somepony from fluterpriest? i like the stories of sad anon in equestria gettingcheered up (or somepony else) but i mostly find cringy stories of already brony guys writing themselves loving their vaifus.

>>27687474
Can't say I know any, but I'd like to read a non-autistic HiE romance as well.

>>27687527
>non-autistic
>romance
There is no such thing as a good romance story. The whole romance genre is low-quality whish fullfilment, by definition.

>>27687531
I've read plenty romance fics that aren't like that. You probably meant HiE.

>>27687531
thats because people write themselves into the story, thats when it starts to get autistic. If they write it from an other perspective like a predetermined personality like most of the time Anon is presented, it can be interesting.

Watching yourself in a mirror doesn't make it someone else.

>>27687604
das deep mane
why are you posting it here?

>>27687639
Oops.

Meant to reply to >>27687599

>>27687648
it actually does, you can hardly know the limits and flaws of yourelf but if you look at it from outside and you treat it as a diferent entity you can actually reflect on it. thats why its so hard to be selfconcious because you can rarely see yourself as somebody else.

>>27687663
If the guy was writing a shitty Gary Stu fuckaru self-insert in the first place, he won't be much different in a third/second person view. His main character will still be portrayed very positively.

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DOWAS hits half a million words and the middle aged horsefucker writing it only averages 300 words per day

>>27688124
that is kinda my point, if they are willing/abele to write about somebody else than themselves its probably not as bad

>>27688276
Even if he was writing about anyone else, they wouldn't change that much, and their portrayal of their self-insert remains extremely positive, no matter who they're writing.

Take that fic with anthro Twilight pov from last thread; the guy wrote from Twilight's pov, but it still turned out shit.

>>27688275
Wait, it's not finished yet? With all these people recommending it in this thread, I thought it was.

>>27688275
What's dowas?

>>27688275
Meanwhile, the DoaM guy and that insane blooming moons person are chuckling quietly in the distance.

>>27688288
the sequel is as long as the original and still ongoing

and your dubs is the best dubs when discussing a story entitled 'Final Solution'

>>27688300
27 years of reign from 1928 election to 1945, 6 million Jews killed, 88 mm gun on the Tiger II and 88 mm on the Tiger I.

27688288 is the ultimate nazi number.

>>27688295
Days of Wasp and Spider, I assume.

>>27688300
Yours ain't too shabby either.

>>27688295
Days of Wasp and Spider

>>27688298
and kudzuhaiku laughs at all of them for no sane reason

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>>27688318

>>27688327
The word count is not the scary part, this thing has almost as many chapters than days I've been watching the show for.

>>27688308
>27688288 is the ultimate nazi number
it would be, except 1945-1928=17

>>27688327
exactly. chase is 2.3 million words and has only been running for 2 years. DoaM is only 1.8m and has been running for over 4. Bloomin moon is only around 1m iirc. its only sad because its the longest series written that no one has ever read

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>>27688345
Fuck me. Well, 1918 is the year the war ended I guess, which marks the end of Reichtangle.

Or some shit.

And isn't DOWAS 250k?

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>>27688354
>And isn't DOWAS 250k
235k
plus 270k words of sequel

>>27688363
and thats not the title that I dont remember. I knew DoWaS had a sequel but I dont recognize the title. did he rename it?

>>27688363
Still four times less than Chase, and a readable amount.

>>27688363
That's a fuckton of bookshelves.
I can see what looks live favs, tracking and a read-later list but the rest is a mystery.

>>27688345
The longest story in Blooming Moon is around 1 million. There are 10 stories in the series that add up to around 4.5 million.

>>27688384
tracking
complete fics
complete series
incomplete series
clop
read
dead
cancelled
faves (I dont actually use that one)
and dropped

using search filters is too much of a pain in the ass on my phone, so I keep comple shit and incomplete shit seperate.

and yes I keep track of deadfics, cancelled fics, and shit that was too retarded to finish reading

>>27688390
yeah 4.4m in total. and Im pretty sure even bleedin has racked up more page views than BRR. talk about a waste of effort

>>27688442
Would it be the weirdest thing you'd ever been asked if I was curious to take a look at that clop folder?

>>27688464
The weirdest thing ever? no not by a long shot.

That being said all of my shelves are set to private and thats not changing

>>27688491
Fair enough tbqh.

Page 10

So I've read The Star In Yellow and it did not disappoint.

Despite the Dark tag it's full of little chuckleworthy tidbits of comedy, perhaps I was in a good mood but this kept me grinning a significant part of the time.

Overall the story is pretty feelsy, it's not the darkest Dark story ever witnessed by anonymous eyes, but it does give an unsettling feeling, and the villain's motivation is sadly understandable if you have a bit of a repressed idealistic streak.

This fic stands out from what I usually expect on FimFic and I'd hapilly recommend it if you're looking for some mild, uneasy chills.

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Could you recommend me your favourite romance stories?
It doesn't really matter the pairing, I just want to read the best romantic stories you know.

>>27689796
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/41313/mood-wings
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/84903/twice-as-bright
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/18087/the-best-night-ever kind of?
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3479/the-games-we-play
There wass this one Ben 10 fanfic I've read a long time ago which was REALLY good. I wish I could find it again.

>>27689796
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/9894/my-little-unicorn-magic-is-believing

>>27689918
>There wass this one Ben 10 fanfic I've read a long time ago which was REALLY good. I wish I could find it again.
Did it ship Ben and Gwen?

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>>27690025

>>27690189
Obviously.
It was really good though. Like, they actually slowly developed feeling for each other for a reason.

>>27690438
Awesome.
That show went off the rails really fast, but I'm fond of what I remember.
I had a good laugh when I found out that in early planning stages, Gwen was supposed to be Ben's classmate who had a crush on him and had agreed to go on a trip with him because she just lusted for the D that hard.

>>27690475
Ah, I forgot to spoiler it.
Eh, whatever. If you ever remember what story it was, let me know.

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>>27690475
I actually watched every Ben 10 cartoon and know like all of the lore, which is pretty embarassing. I like the show though, wonder how the new reboot will turn out. Probably shit.

In the early planning stages, the show looked like this. Grandpa Max could shoot lasers out of his nostrils.

Also, I just found the fic thanks to TVTropes. Don't get your hopes up though, cause I said, I've read it a long time ago, and I have no idea if it's actually good. At least it was much better than the other ones I've read at the time.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8440324/1/Little-Moments

mods pls no ban

>>27690512
Ooooooooh... Director's Cut. Sounds promising.

I'll give it a read sometime next week, it'd be a nice change of pace.

>new reboot
Oh, yeah. They had several of those. /co/ tells me they're all terrible.

>>27690561
>They had several of those
You mean the series? They've all been sequels. Pretty alright, too, even according to /co/.

>>27690617
Huh, I must have gone there on a sour day, then...
Either way, the sequels never caught my eye, even more so when they redesigned Gwen.

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>>27690633
Well, they're a love it or hate it sort of a deal. Alien Force and Ultimate Alien are more serious takes on the series, while Omniverse tried to go back to being less serious, just like the original series, but went too far in the other direction. People who were working on it really cared about the universe though, and focused heavily on the lore.
The artstyle was garbage, though.

>>27689796
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/7531/eyes-on-you
I'll never not recommend this.

>>27679479
10 minutes of screentime is alright tho

>inb4 indigofag gb2 /nigger/
>there are only 90 minutes in the film

>>27691896
screentime as in her appearing anywhere at all

>>27691900
oh
i didn't watch it so i'll fuck off

>>27679474

>no hooves
>and no screen time either

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bump

>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/317740/silver-glows-journal
Okay, I know there's some other anons here reading this shit. So, does anyone have a theory as to how Silver is going to explain herself once the shit hits the fan?


Basically, if she doesn't think Aric/Meghan would be upset if they knew what she was doing with Meghan/Aric, why hasn't she mentioned it to either of them?
And if she does think they'd be mad, why has she shown no sign of remorse in anything written so far?


I'm normally a fan of Biscuit's stuff, but I honestly don't see how he plans to resolve this without some blatant ass-pull.

Has anyone read http://www.fimfiction.net/story/258497/shifting-melodies? It was at around 500k words when I first found it, but now it's over 1 million. The premise looks okay and I've seen it recommended before, but I'd like a second opinion before I dive into something that'll probably be twice as long as War and Peace by the time it's done.

>>27693150
>I honestly don't see how he plans to resolve this

Its one of those chapter-a-day fics. I'm fairly positive hes not planning anything beyond todays handful of paragraphs. the same as everyone else doing a chapter-a-day collection of words

Okay guys. I'm gonna need the most popular or successful Changeling-centric fics, and/or a comprehensive list of clichés surrounding Changelings. Don't ask why. It's probably easy to guess anyway.

>>27694102
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/87718/a-novel-tale
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/74014/body-and-mind
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/26192/mendacity
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/60491/an-affliction-of-the-hearthttp://www.fimfiction.net/story/22618/flitter
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/25149/thrown-abroad

too lazy to bang out a list of changeling cliches, but heres most of the top relevant fics

Keeping it Simple
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/3513/keeping-it-simple
261k words [E] [Comedy] [SoL]

After a noodle incident involving the mane 6 and a runaway apple cart, big Mac is injured and unable to work. AJ takes over on the farm and Mac is forced to figure out how to have a life that doesn't revolve around Sweet Apple Acres.

This one took me forever to finish. Being slice of life, there isn't much of a plot beyond "Big Mac is forced to spend time with his sisters' friends". Its tagged comedy, but the truth of the matter is this was one of the most depressing fics I've ever read. The story of a guy forced to drop out of elementary school to work a farm all day every day just to save his home from his own family (who are all a bunch of assholes) until he eventually gets kicked off his farm by his own sister. He's got zero control of his life, being forced into things and not having the balls to say no. And Mactavia has got to be one of the strangest forced ships I've seen yet.

If you're looking for a light hearted fun story, run away. If you want to be depressed about a terse doormat being a terse doormat then this one is for you

So is DoaM actually worth reading? I've heard some people praise it and others call it piss.

>>27695159
its better than average as far as HiEs go, but thats not really saying much

Its pretty much your standard wangsty, genre savvy, emoteen clone/puppet gets sucked into equestria by twilight fucking up a spell via discord whos attempting to commit suicide because hes a billion years old and bored but emopuppet gets sidetracked by fucking everyone/thing after getting raped by pinkie and rara (though that bit may have gotten retconned during the rewrite)

The quality fluctuates quite a bit depending on the arc in question. some parts are pretty decent, others are pants on head retarded. parts are fun, while others are spoopy

If HiE is your thing then its worth a read through. If youre not big on AiE/HiE then dont waste your time. God knows I've dropped worse things than DoaM and there must be a reason why I've stuck with it for this long

>>27688363
>This story has nothing to do with the Holocaust

Then don't title it "Final Solution," you sperg!

>>27694951
I`m two-thirds of the way through that story, and I have to agree with that assessment, though I'm actually enjoying the Mactavia because Octavia is one of the few characters who doesn't claim to be trying to help Big Mac.

This story actually reminds me a bit of Cadence in a Minor. The story was originally tagged comedy, and the author seemed to think he was writing comedy, but it was actually a story about Shining Armor and Cadance's marriage falling apart due to their PTSD from the Canterlot Wedding. Not a bad story (other than the ending), but definitely not what I signed up for.

Update on this story I reviewed last thread (>>27668751):

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/279271/new-beginnings
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/306592/normal-life
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/332488/consequences

As I said before, the first story "New Beginnings" is pretty good, as far as HiE/Luna shipfics go. But now that I've read the sequels, the gradual power creep that started at the end of book 1 has continued throughout, and it's starting to get a bit out of hand.

Book 1: got a job; made some friends; started dating Luna; singlehandedly saved the entire changeling species
Book 2: became one of only two trained unicorn war mages in the world; singlehandedly saved the entire changeling species, again; near-singlehandedly captured Sunset Shimmer, and recovered the crown
Book 3: learned dreamwalking, and started hunting Night Terrors; discovered that he can use dark magic without getting addicted due to his human background

Plus, he keeps getting better at unicorn magic, with seemingly no upper limit. As of the latest chapter of book 3, he's currently trying to learn the butterfly-wing spell, which Twilight was barely able to cast in Sonic Rainboom.

Overall, I can't really recommend the sequels. The series seems to be headed in the usual direction (toward "overpowered OC saves the world"), it's just taking its time getting there.

>>27695619
yeah but Octavia is such a cunt in this one. Shes literally the closest thing to a villain in the story and the absolute worst possible person involved

Even Bluebro comes off as a decent character in comparison

>>27695802
I read the first two after the second one ended, so ts within the last 3-4 months. And I remember very little of that.

Its literally that forgettable. But its a story of a human that turned into a micro horse and proceeded to bed a goddess, so its pretty much expected to be crap

What is the greatest AiE romance you know? it can be a list if you have more. I just finished some sad ones and im hooked. Not to the sad part but if the end is good im into it.

>>27695852
exchange.

greatest AiE without question, hands down

>>27695862
well until a competitor comes around ill have to check this one out i guess.

>>27695891
>until a competitor comes out
>for a good AiE fic
You'll be waiting a looooong time.

>>27696018
yeah. exchange is essentially the only AiE worth reading, sorry.

>>27696036
now im afraid to read it. i have been reading smaller ones with around 10-20k words and really enjoyed them. if you say exchange is the only one worth reading i might not enjoy the short ones after :(

>>27696105
Don't worry, if you enjoyed those, then your taste is shit enough to still like them afterwards.

>>27696160
uhm, thanks?

>>27696326
hes right you know. AiE is the genre that HiE aficionados look down on. The only thing beneath you is anthro

>>27696367
well i rather read about Anon than some edgelord emo guy grunting about how his dad does not appreciate inuyasha then hanging himself waking up in equestria. Anyway i just started reafing fics so i dont know what else i might like.

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well thats very convenient. I've never dropped a fic in the first chapter before.

Generally shitty fics will start off mediocre to lull you into a false sense of security before becoming crapfests.

Shitty horsewords need to start starting off shitty so that we dont waste any more effort in attempting to read them than necessary.

thank you, strawberry gamer, for not wasting more than 5 minutes of my time

>>27696421
I already hate the first paragraph.
I feel like the authour is just a kid who doesn't really have his own style yet and tries to rip off someone else, failing miserably.
Source: I used to write like that

>>27696509
>I already hate the first paragraph.
yeah it was a rough start. But then many writers falter a bit until they find their stride. This shitsack has a sequel now, so maybe this kid has figured out something that works.

But I'll never know. Terrible style followed by non-ironically trolololing is an unequivocal dealbreaker

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>>27696421
>Because. I'm a Troll. Trolololol.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/331407/swallow-the-moon
Rate. Be gentle.

somebody tell me to go here to post my story after saying it was a shit

please read and upvote.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/319699/1/where-is-your-dude-tonight/i-hope-he-is-a-gentleman

>>27696757
It's not awful. The writing is a bit clumsly, you repeat yourself a bit, you lay it on pretty thick, and the exposition feels a bit longer than it should.
If this were a video-game cutscene, I'd skip it halfway through.

There are many small but noticeable mistakes. I'll skip over the grammatical mistakes because I'm neither a native english speaker nor a grammar nazi, but you do surprising things like calling the moon a star. Of course I won't need to tell you that it isn't one, but hen I have to re-read a sentence a couple times to make sure I haven't gone crazy, it kinda breaks immersion.

But let's ignore all of that, the way you write Celestia is interesting. I'd imagine with her thousand of years of experience she would have a little bit of a more elaborate reaction to her sister – Princess of the Night and ruler of Equestria – disappearing than waiting several days doing nothing and sighting when she doesn't magically come back.
I'm not a tactical genius, but when your highest ranking leader and family member disappears you don't wait two weeks to start investigating.

Overall and as always, I didn't even finish the first chapter, so my comment is worthless and feel free to disregard it.
All the best,
anon

>>27697107
Before I even read your story, I'm going to stop you with that second part.
>Please read and upvote
>Upvote
If your story gets upvotes, it's because the story is good, not because you asked for them. The request for them will do nothing but hurt you here, it makes you sound too desperate and less like you want to write a good story but more like you just want praise. People will shit all over you for it. Just something to bear in mind. I'll give it a read real quick and see what thoughts I have.

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>>27697107
>please read and upvote.
Welcome to 4chan, I guess.

>>27697168
Thanks anyway, Anon.

>>27697234
Well, that's a little too harsh. At least give him some feedback.

>>27697289
People would if only he was a human. But no all I see is a sub-human trash.

Good day and another downvote from another anon.: ^)

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>>27697331
Not even him. But your edge is on point, Anon, I'm sure you must have a lot of /b/ cred on this super dark, dangerous and scary website only for the toughest shitposters on the Internet.

>>27697289
My feedback is, don't come here like a little bitch posting something that you're pretty sure is shit, and then expecting people to not only read it but upvote it regardless.

Be nice and I'll be nice. I read a couple sentences from being linked into the first chapter instead of the description, and I didn't like what I saw, that and the painful lack of basic internet decency is enough for me to keep my downvote.

If the story is geniunely good, one downvote will not stop people from reading it. But maybe it'll stop that guy from acting like a bitch.

>>27697234
>voting at all
He probably just posted someone else's fic to bait people into downvoting it.

>>27697107
I just finished your first chapter and there are substantial issues. While this isn't even in the top 20 worst fics I've read I've got a hobby of trying to give myself cancer via fanfiction It isn't really good. Let's talk the overall problems:
>Pacing
This is the biggest one. The plot feels as if it's on fast forward. Don't panic about this, many people's early attempts at writing are rushed. The relationship between them isn't given enough time to develop and feel natural to the reader.
How do you fix that? Spend more time developing the relationship between them. The "fallen head over heels on first sight" thing generally doesn't play very well in writing a standard love story
>Characterization
This one isn't the best, your characters feel like they've been assigned one or two attributes and that's it. This one is a harder thing to get right and it takes a ton of practice. Making good characters is probably the single most important skill when writing fiction. A lot of people will continue to read a story that has a bland plot or setting if the characters are interesting enough.
To fix this one is a bit harder. I can't just say "develop your characters more" because that's like saying in order to fix this problem you have to fix this problem. There are a couple links to tutorials and such at the top of the page, I'd say you should check those out for sure. Hopefully I've been at least a little helpful.

>>27697356
If so I'll be happy to be part of his 3-shitposters-and-a-half strong personnal army, because from what little I saw that story has little going for it.

>>27697240
I started writing a thousand chars about how you shouldn't give up and everyone starts out not so great, especially me, then it turned into a blog post.
Point is, don't give up. It looks like you give a shit and that means you'll get good.

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>>27697345
Considering his last story, I don't even know if we can save him.

>>27697398
>Cancelled
Always a silver lining.

>>27697398
Anon, have you ever made a mistake? He came here when somebody told him to. It's clear that he wants to get better. With some work he can actually get better.

>>27697398
Oh.

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>>27697411
>It's clear that he wants to get better.

>>27697390
i wish i could continue writing but every time i would start again i read the first fic i wrote with myself in it. It was so cringe i literally have to stop and skip parts because i just cant take it. (it contains a romantic moment with humanised fluttershy, it was wriitten way before EG so that helps a bit, a long detailed story about how equestria is a matriarchal society, and me using a rasengan, and it was only like 5k words! i have no idea how it turned so bad)

>>27697427
He was told he was shit. People told him that he should come here to get advice on how to get better. He actually came here. Yeah, he fucked up on asking for upvotes, but he actually came and asked for help. Most people really wouldn't do that.

>>27697461
I actually posted it and after seeing Autie's comment and pretended I was him, anon.

I could PM him right away if you want.

>>27697429
>i wish i could continue writing but every time i would start again i read the first fic i wrote with myself in it
That is literally how everyone started.
I've always wanted to learn how to draw because I have zero artistic talent. Yersterday I tried drawing random shit around me to practice, and the result looks like a disabled child has a stroke and makes me want to stab my eyes in out of shame. I'd probably be b& for trolling if I posted that to /ic/.

But that sure as fuck isn't going to stop me because as long as you give a shit, you'll get better. The proof of that is that everything you did before is usually worse than what you're doing now, so you should keep going. That, and because it's fun.

>>27697466
Man, I wish I could just force myself to give a shit. I really enjoy writing, but it's so hard for me to start something new.

>>27697461
If the author posts here and geniunely wants help, I'll be happy to be helpful. Until then, I'll avoid wasting my time.

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>>27697465
Well shit, I posted that long wall of text about pacing and characters for nothing. Meh. Kept me busy for a few minutes so that I didn't have to think about who I am and what I do with my life.

>>27697499
I can always send it to Ytterbius for some tips.

Doing it right away actually, gonna give you guys the response when I get it.

>>27697499
>Kept me busy for a few minutes so that I didn't have to think about who I am and what I do with my life.
Life has no meaning. Success is subjective. If horse words make you happy, keep on keeping on.

>>27697513
Problem solved. Thanks Anon.

>>27697545
You're welcome.
For that bit of cheap half assed pseudo-hedonism, that'll be one link to the best story you've read this year please.

>>27697568
I just got around to reading this one. Holy goddamn shit, it destroyed me.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/19198/background-pony

>>27697581
Aw man and I read that two years ago!
But thanks anyways, maybe I'll get around to reading it again.
People may call it overrated, but it gave me legit chills and I think it deserves all the praise it got.

Now if only every SS&E story was like this...

>>27697603
Yeah. He's a bit hit or miss. I actually liked End of Ponies when I read it. I'm not sure if it's as good as I remember though.

>>27697620
I liked end of ponies too, and it was consistently pretty good, but after half a million words it felt like it was going for half a million more of the same without really anything new. I had started to read the next unreleased/cancelled act but I gave up because that would just be delaying the innevitable.

I think it might have turned into another DoaM has it not stopped, there's always more to read and at no exact point does it really turn bad, but eventually you realise that maybe you should stop.

>>27697641
>there's always more to read and at no exact point does it really turn bad, but eventually you realise that maybe you should stop.
Huh, I finally found a way to describe why I dropped Austraeoh.

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>oh, i better get around to finishing that wai wai riff
>i haven't touched this for a year and a half
>perhaps i should write up a quick recap of everything that has happened so far, in case anyone wants to tag along
>just a small one though
>maybe make it a bit longer, i can't expect anyone to remember anything about this
I've written 2800 words and I'm still not done. Send help.

>>27698308
>Cilestia

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>>27698318
You haven't seen anything, Anon. I've read 26 chapters of this thing.

>>27698329
What shit is this

>>27698340
You've never read the wai wai riff?

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>>27698329
>and don't try to escape, there is no escape for you

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>>27698340
I take it you weren't here back in 2014, when I posted about this. Or you just ignored it, which is probably the sane man's choice.

Basically it's a horrible story written by some Kraut. It's real bad, and I used to read it, post commented excerpts, and make fun of it. Something something insecurity.
Being a sad human being, I'm coming back to it now. At least for a chapter or two.

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>>27698357
You can pull up any chapter, jump to a random spot, and you're basically guaranteed to find something really fucking dumb.

Here's a favourite moment. The main character stabs Celestia because he's kind of upset.
It never has any consequences for anyone involved, and is never brought up again.
It's the "I definitely have breast cancer" moment of this fic.

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>>27698329
>Applejack asked a question
>"You right everypony"
I think he lost track of his own story somewhere between those two lines of dialogue.

>>27698668
Wait, when the fuck did I attach that picture

>>27698414
>The princess got abort.

Where can I find wai-wai itself? I've read all of the riff up on the pastebin. I need more.

>>27698905
I think Andre nuked the story.

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>>27698905
Andre blew himself up, taking all his stories with him, sometime back in 2015. But he had deleted wai-wai long before that.
Rest in peace, my sweet prince.

I'm only able to continue my riff because I already had time to memorise the entire story, and by invoking his spirit with my dark magic.

Also I have a backup. Want it?

>>27698971
Yes. I need this in my life. Anon, I'm so happy right now.
Did andre throw a shit fit when he blew himself up?

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>>27699138
Andre's FimFiction career ended not with a shitfit, but a shitwhimper.
As for waiwai, he seemed to come to some sudden dislike of the story, despite the fact that none of his newer stories were any better. I tried to talk him into keeping it, but it couldn't be helped.
Also, it was some other Anon who got these backups for me. So he's to thank/blame for all of this.
Anyway, here's the backup:
https://a.cuntflaps.me/djmqqk.7z

I have various other Andre texts in the vault, but they're not something I've ever really looked at.

>>27699357
I'm probably going to regret this. The cringe thread just isn't doing it for me right now.

I wish more stories were about John. I liked John.

>>27699507
Friendly reminder than John is directly responsible for the death of the human species.

>>27699525
A noble endeavor if I ever knew one.

>>27699525
He made the AI that nuked us. That is indirect responsibility. Now, when he could have gone back and didn't, he became responsible for us staying dead but it's okay. He did it for DASHI.

>>27696414
>i dont know what else i might like.

Humans were never supposed to be a part of Equestria per Faust's show bible, so maybe skip HiE and AiE to start with?

>>27699638
Going by fausts wants, most of our tags shouldnt exist. horror? thriller? gore? sex? anthro? crossover? dark? sad? drama? EqG?

fausts bible done got thrown out years ago, so not really a valid argument.

>>27699638
I don't think you know the purpose of fanfiction.

>>27699743
>"I set Faust's Bible down once we crossed the river of Season 2, Anon. Why are you still carrying it?"
>And suddenly Anon achieved enlightenment.

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How do you guys r8 this one? It's updating pretty slowly but I really like it so far.

>>27699940
That's mighty euphoric of you there, anon

>>27698905
If you download the fimfarchive, you can probably find the fic there. IIRC it doesn't remove any deleted fics.

>>27696757
>name of the author is the same as the name of the organization in the fic
Instant fucking nope. It is slightly better than having a character named after yourself, but since the latter is a 100% guaranteed sign of a self-insert, you're not likely to get much charity for it.

>>27697107
>chapter link
>not even trying to pretend it's not his fic
>nobody calls him on it
Do I have to do everything around here?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/319699/where-is-your-dude-tonight
At least the 0:10 vote ratio should counteract any benefit the free views might have given it.

>>27697568
>one link to the best story you've read this year please
Gonna go with "most promising story I started reading this year"
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/274900/a-sparkle-ling-perfection
Seems like it's going to be pretty cool, too bad the author updates so slowly.

>>27698318
>Cantelot
>they KNOW what HAPPENDED

>>27699357
>So he's to thank/blame for all of this.
You're welcome/I'm sorry

>>27700141
>euphoric
>in reference to a religious parable
I don't think you understand that meme.

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>>27700141
Pls anon, I seek to attain the Brahma-loka, don't be a Narakasattva.

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>>27680271
I get around 500 new notifications a day.

>>27700163
unfortunately the epubs in the archive stripped out all of the embedded shit and waiwai just isnt the same without the colluhdoody cutscene screencaps

>>27700358
are you tracking everything or one of those tards who follows everyone?

>>27694102
>clichés surrounding Changelings
>hivemind
>they're insects
>Bon Bon's a changeling
>one of the M6 is one and gets revealed during the love explosion in ACW
>Chrysalis is the "mother" of all the changelings
>a changeling crashes in a forest and is raised by OCs
>a changeling gets into wacky/serious hijinks in a big city while struggling not to be revealed
>x is transformed into a changeling, body horror ensues
>Chrysalis wins and creates the Matrix to suck all the love out of ponies

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/331514/rip-and-tear
Rate for me.

>>27702045
>Rate for me
>doom crossover
subpar.

>>27702045

No, John, you are the ponies.

>>27700096
Never heard of it

How is there still no fic about Cranky's adventures around Equestria and how he met Steven Magnet and thet changeling that came to his wedding?

>>27702454
because only a braindead autist would bother trying to use anything from that episode as the basis for a story

>>27702492
Because you didn't like it? Doesn't change the fact it's canon.

>>27702496
Doesn't change the fact it's autistic shit.

There's so much more to be elaborated on in SoL, but the changeling is but a minor event that didn't have any effect at all.

>>27702492
>i don't like thing
>therefore it is autistic

>>27702700
>but the changeling is but a minor event that didn't have any effect at all.
It implies he's Cranky's friend, which means no hivemind and that changelings are allowed to live in Equestria.
It'd also be interesting to know how they've met.
The relationship between Cranky and Steven, as well as Cranky and the changeling is likely the most interesting thing SoL has given us. Certainly one with the most potential.

>>27702703
He's probably from /v/. "Autistic" in this context doesn't even mean anything.

>>27702703
Look, we had much more to write about than that.

>Bon Bon is a secret asian
>Time Turner is a physician
>Octavia and DJPon3 live together
>But no, let's write about something appearing for two seconds onscreen.

>>27702707
>Implies he's Cranky's friend

It also implies everyone is friend to what was an antisocial aspie, including Shining Armor, Luna, Celestia and Cadence, and that they didn't just come for Twilight.

You can agree Celestia knows about Cranky's lesson on friendship, but it still is something for three of the country's greatest leaders to come to a wedding in a small town of no more than a thousand souls. Unless Twilight herself asked them to spare some time for it, I doubt they would go there when they have so much to do.

>>27702715
I dunno, Anon. I don't quite like you, so you're probably autistic.

>>27702719
What tells you I'm not?

>>27702715
>Unless Twilight herself asked them to spare some time for it, I doubt they would go there when they have so much to do.
I'm glad you have insider knowledge on exactly what Cranky did when wandering Equestria his entire life.
Come on, Anon. Imagine an adventure fic about a grumpy donkey wandering the world in search of the love of his life, meeting new people and creatures and getting involved in adventures he doesn't want to get involved in. If that doesn't sound like something with a lot of potential to you, then you might have a serious case of nofunallowed.

I forgot about Bon Bon being a secret agent, though, that has a lot of potential as well.
But fic #19225 about Time Turner or fic #2985298509235 about Octavia and Vinyl living together are really boring.

>>27702733
That's actually interesting.

Hoofhicker's guide to Equestria?

>>27702736
*Hoofhiker

My bad.

>>27702736
Hooflicker's*

>>27702454

I thought about it, but there are other things I'd rather be failing to write.

My head-canon has him as a 007 style secret agent for Celestia in his youth. Matilda was an agent for a rival power; they crossed paths, crossed one another, and generally put duty before romance.

Steven would be... I don't know. Probably not another agent, but likely a skilled friend (or maybe just a noisy distraction. Unwitting comedy relief sidekick, perhaps) who picks him up whenever Matilda saves his life, but steals his microfilm and disappears.

>>27702805
>My head-canon has him as a 007 style secret agent for Celestia in his youth. Matilda was an agent for a rival power; they crossed paths, crossed one another, and generally put duty before romance.

The show literally shows them kissing at the gala and Matilda giving him her address.

>>27702820

Handwave, handwave, handwave, it's fine. It can be worked around...

>>27702760
Hooklickers guide to equestria sounds more like a subs kinky romp through the country

>>27702980

>Although the custom of kissing a mare's hoof upon greeting her has long since fallen from Canterlot society, the mares of Mistress Rosehoof's Night Academy (453 Stirrup Row) are well-prepared to instruct the errant stallion in the proper manner of servicing the hooves of his betters. 100bits/1 hr session, additional subjects of study and remedial lessons by arrangement. Rating: 4/4 horseshoes.

>>27702980
Lick the hooves of important person so they give you free food, a place to live and some stuff. Repeat, and travel all Equestria with it.

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Alright, how do I fix this? In Fimfic's edit mode, there's no distinction between open and close quotes. But it automatically sets them in the regular display, and it's confused by em-dashes.

>>27703837
Oh wait, fuck me. It helps when I actually save changes.

>>27703837
“Have some UTF8 quotes just in case”
— Anonymous

Knighty if you see this, can we get a way to know the date when we read a story/chapter, or on what day it was added to a bookshelf?

Since you can sort things by "date added" I guess you might have that info somewhere.

>>27702715
>Bon Bon is a secret asian
>Bon Bon is an expert in martial arts learned through her infancy living in Chineighse slums until a secret Equestrian organization recruited her.
If it was written in the style of 70's kung-fu exploitation movies, I'd read it.

>>27704394
ugh. no
I've seen waaaaaaaay too many fics written by weebs involving neighponese mouth katana blademasters to ever permit anyone to write about far eastern ponies, ironically or otherwise

>>27704603
ok

>>27704394
Secret agent, which Asian is a pun for.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPA5gQ54vAA&feature=youtu.be
More bleeding whetever fuck

What Goes Up soon.

>>27704674
FUCKING FINALLY

imma creaming my pants.

>>27704674
Holy shit, you're alive!

>>27704702
>>27704703
I thought I was dead too

I certainly felt it inside a few times. But then I realized I can't die yet, I have commissions to finish and Kingdom Hearts 3 to play

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>>27704719
Keep it up, Vg.

Hi, can i get some feedback on my story idea? I did not start writing yet, i just have some characters, scenes, plots and i might get them into one but im nervous. It sounds good in my head but i would like to know what you think.

So i guess it would be a HiE story with humanised characters since im not really into the horse aspect as much as their personality. I would write about a guy who gets into an alternate equestria. I have a lot of small conflicts in line but the main problem would be he could go home anytime and everybody else wants him to leave too but he does not want. He just want to stick around and help them doing epic quests. Real life is okay but a world with magic, strange interesting creatures and exciting places sounds way better than coming home.

I wanted to give him some advantage to have. Some powers and i tought about what superpower would be not so owerpowered but a little interesting twist to their already magic and fighting filled world. Its music. I dont want to tell how but he would gain the ability (or mental disorder) to sync the real world to music only he hears. Others wont notice it but for him its like hearing a song you listened to long ago. You dont really know what will happen but in the back of your mind you know something will happen and you can use this. Predicting the movement of others, finding the best moment to start your offense or shift to defense by listening to the change of rythm. Im not sure i will be able to give it back in words what i have in vision. I dont plany any romantic or sexual parts but i dont know, maybe if it comes naturally. I dont want people to hink its a shipfic with my waifu. Soo what do you think?

>>27705243
>HiE

Stopped reading there.

> but the main problem would be he could go home anytime and everybody else wants him to leave too but he does not want.

Then he's just a dick. He should leave asap.

>Random human comes in
>Boom powers

U wot

Why don't you just make him an omniscient narrator while you're at it? He gets a superpower with no disadvantage at all, and that power makes him pretty invulnerable.

I have a character who has a similar power of omniscience over events, but he paid it off by being in a coma for a few years, due to the ridiculous amount of information he had to manage coupled with extremely bad short-term memory, and even then I consider him OP. Yours just comes in, has random powers with no drawback and is hated by everyone somehow.

I'd say this is bumping b8.

>>27700195
>Gonna go with "most promising story I started reading this year"
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/274900/a-sparkle-ling-perfection
Yep, it's pretty damn good, can't wait for more.

>Seems like it's going to be pretty cool, too bad the author updates so slowly.
Aaand fuck. I guess if the author is consistent we're due for two chapters sometime next month.

>>27705243
>I have a lot of small conflicts in line but the main problem would be he could go home anytime and everybody else wants him to leave too but he does not want.
He just want to stick around and help them doing epic quests.
Sounds like the kind of character that you generally don't identify with because he's kind of an asshole and nobody really wants him to be here, anyways.

>Real life is okay but a world with magic, strange interesting creatures and exciting places sounds way better than coming home.
That doesn't sound great, it's getting awfully close to looking like a self insert. Your life sucks while pastel pony Equestria is a literal utopia, we know. It's been done to death and then some.
Do not do that.

>I wanted to give him some advantage to have. Some powers and i tought about what superpower would be not so owerpowered but a little interesting twist to their already magic and fighting filled world.
Bzzt, wrong answer. When your obvious self insert ALSO gets special superhero bullshit powers, then you're hapilly crossing several bright red flashing lines in the sand.
It pretty much couldn't get any worse without into gratuitous wish fullfilment sex.

>I dont plany any romantic or sexual parts but i dont know, maybe if it comes naturally.
And that's a bingo!
Your "idea" is the caricature of what not to do and the reason nobody takes Human in Equestria stories seriously anymore.

>>27705365
>Stopped reading there
you write awfully lot about what you did not read
>Then he's just a dick. He should leave asap.
yes he should he is in danger for no reason other than excitement
>>Random human comes in
>>Boom powers
just because i did not specif how he gets the power does not mean its just "boom" deus ex machina
>power makes him pretty invulnerable
Would if he had any power at all over that. No talent in magic, never used weapons before and have no idea how to use magic. This basically is only enough to keep him barely alive and out of the way of others.
>ridiculous amount of information he had to manage
he have no idea what will happen he just heas the music and assumes something will happend. Where will it come from or how will it affect him or his surroundings are unknown to him.
>hated by everyone
Who said he is hated? They just worry that a human with seemingly no powers other than sheer luck keep sticking around and they just want him out of danger.

>>27705609
It's bait, but I'm bored. I'll bite.

>I'm in danger in this magical land I know nothing of and where everyone wants me to fuck off
>Hey I'll stay! I'm not a dick at all

>Do not specify how he got those

The how did he? Why didn't you say so in your post?

>Hey, I can feel what my opponent will do before he does it
>Not OP at all!

The pony I'm talking about has the same ability as this, and he has almost literally become a god since no one can even touch him. He just feels anything that will happen, and thus can counter anything.

>They just worry that a human with seemingly no powers other than sheer luck keep sticking around and they just want him out of danger.

Then they wouldn't want him to leave you dumbshit. They would shelter him, not tell him to fuck off from Equestria.

>>27705641
>>27705578
>>27705365
i feel like you exaggerate it a bit but i get what you say.
I did not want to go into a 5k word explanation what were the limits of his powers but i guess i will need to during some point of the story or it might be confusing.
I will have to rethink some aspects of his motives and the reation of others but i think when its not so compated it will make more sense.
I dont know whats wrong with HiE and i can only guess why you dont like self inserting. If even the writer cant identify with the protagonist then who will?

>>27705834
>I dont know whats wrong with HiE and i can only guess why you dont like self inserting. If even the writer cant identify with the protagonist then who will?
If you go talk to your friends and try to spend an hour telling them how you're awesome and your life is great and everything goes perfectly well for you, they'll wonder what is wrong with you, get bored 30 seconds in and ignore you.

Well turns out if you write a self insert story about how the main character is awesome, has all these OP suporpowers and gets all that sweet pony plot living the dream in Equestria, people will get bored out of their minds a thousand words in and they'll go waste their time somewhere else.

Nobody gives a shit about you, and nobody wants to read your self insert wish fullfillment.

>>27705834
>>27705905
This really. Your life is worthless, no one will like it, and if you create the main character so that specifically you can relate to it, no one else will.

Everyone is supposed to relate to the character. The larger he is, the more fans. The thinner he is, like a specific self-insert, the less will like it.

>>27705243
>a HiE story with humanised characters since im not really into the horse aspect as much as their personality
>I wanted to give him some advantage to have. Some powers and i tought about what superpower would be not so owerpowered but a little interesting twist to their already magic and fighting filled world. Its music. I dont want to tell how but he would gain the ability (or mental disorder) to sync the real world to music only he hears.
>Predicting the movement of others, finding the best moment to start your offense or shift to defense by listening to the change of rythm.
Be honest. You've been diagnosed with autism.

>>27705243
Hello, Olli.
You might want to ask other communities about this, like FimFiction, Ponychan, or reddit.

Good luck.
- Anon

>>27705905
>>27705973
>>27706103
I should really stop this conversation but i wanted to finish what i started. You basically just took every word i wrote to the extreme. Is it because of the masses of fics you described? "spend an hour telling them how you're awesome" Yes that must be boring, a story with no hardships, challanges, but wishfullfillment is awful. But were my idea really that bad or you just filed the holes i did not explain with what bad experience you have? I just tried to paint a concept but you filled it with assumptions, corrupted by the years of reading clopfics. (>gets all that sweet pony plot What pony plot? i said no romance or ponies) What happened to you that made yout his sour and angry? I said i did not want my charater to be the saviour of all living, just a guy wanting to have fun. You automatically tought it will be a godlike asshole with power of a thousand suns.
I can salvage some useful feedback from that but i guess its the wrong place to ask for guidance when every response i get is tainted with supressed hatred.

>>27705973
>The larger he is, the more fans
Personally I have a hard time relating to fat people.

>>27706143
thanks i will

>>27706154
>You basically just took every word i wrote to the extreme.
Trust me, I didn't. I've just seen the exact same thing in autistic animu fanfics countless times.
It could be a good fic if you're an incredible writer who can really turn those cliches into a work of art, but it seems you have pretty big grammar problems and difficulties with explaining your ideas.

>>27706182
Nice one, Anon.
You forgot the name field.

>>27706160
Large as in a broad, general personality. The more specific his personality, the less people can relate.

>>27706154

The only assumptions we have are the ones gained by reading stories like yours.

Oh, do you want the Fimfic view?

You story is perfect, very interesting, would read.

Happy?

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>>27706193
i will not use this name again here

>>27706204
Just realise we're not being hard on you because we hate you or anything. It's just that the story your pitching is painfully similar to a large amount of downright terrible HiE stories.

>>27706193
Is there any excuse for bad grammar?

Even a native French speaker such as Autie has a grasp of English grammar.

>>27706225
He's right too. If you want to write, start with small stories such as SoL, not epic adventures. It will make you gain much experience.

>>27706225
We could probably grow to hate him. I mean, if we really tried, we should be perfectly capable of that.

>>27706241
Why should we, unless he does shit? If he executes his idea well, I have no reason to hate him.

If he does bad I will shit on him though.

>>27706252
Perhaps I'm just in a hatin' mood?

>>27706266
Haters gon' hate I guess.

>>27706199
a bit better
>>27706233
and yes thats part of the reason im not writing it yet. Im still a student. I cant speak english well enough to make it as good as i could. Mistakes like those i made in my original post could ruin the whole. And translating directly from my language would not work either.
>>27706241
i dont doubt :)
>>27706252
i wont execute it. or not yet and not in this form. I might just practice with some greentext. Maybe i skip the whole superpower stuff and just write "dick anon wont go home" stories and make it a comedy

>>27706282
>translating directly
Are you, by any chance, German?

>>27706282
>Im still a student

No excuse. I'm an university student, and I have perfect grasp of French, English, Spanish and can speak Mandarin. Unless you're an underage, in which case enjoy your ban.

Also, your original post was full of errors, but your other posts were too, hence us hating. Come on, you have a corrector integrated in your browser, use it.

>Greentext

pls no

>>27706282
not even close, its a Finno-Ugric language in a sea of Indo-European, Hungarian by the way

>>27706320
finngolian pls leave

>>27706310
And when did you start learnig english? I started it 2 years ago. Its not that bad.

>>27706349
We have mandatory English classes from Elementary 1 and up, and I stopped in CÉGEP, so about 11 years of English.

That's in a place where 95% of the people have French as their main language.

I don't get people who favorite your fic but don't upvote it. Yes, the facebook buttons are bullshit, but they're the ones that show up to tell people if your fic is shit or not.

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>>27706404
>I don't get people who favorite your fic but don't upvote it.
Yeah, that drives me nuts as well.
Hell, even if you thought the story was bad and you're favouriting for the sake of it, at least downvote it. I can't understand why people fave but don't vote.

>>27706233
>Is there any excuse for bad grammar?
Absolutely not. I know me and Autismo have a pretty good understanding of English grammar despite not being native English speakers. The people who don't are honestly just idiots.

>>27706370
well i live in a shithole ghetto where you were lucky to know how to fkin read in elementary 1. The first time i got a real class in english were in the second year of high school. before that i only saw english text in computer games. My parets did not give a shit. Now i work and have some free time to improve it maybe. Ill ask a teacher at the uni whats wrong with my grammar.

>>27706426
thats "Autismo and i have a pretty good understanding of English grammar"

>>27706282
Just remember, greentext really doesn't translate to prose well. It's a very simplistic medium.

>>27706459
Well, hey, I didn't say a perfect understanding, did I?

>>27706404
>>27706419
Some people still use favourites as their read later lists.

>>27706445
I'm a first generation Chinese immigrant. My parent lived in a three room apartment made for one person at most. We moved into another slightly larger apartment at the age of five.

We had mandatory English courses, which I sucked at, so I went in remediation from 1st grade to 2nd. I had a basic facebook speech understanding of English at the end of my elementary.

The, I got online, and taught myself English with websites and forums. By Secondary second, I was one of the top students in English in my school. By sec 4, people thought I was anglophone.

You're at uni and struggle with the most important language of the online and business world. You have literally no excuse.

>>27706459
That's.

Capitalizing I

Those are grammar errors, even worse than syntax.

>>27706510
>Then

Bloody fuck.

>>27706491
Well that's even more baffling.

>>27706510
Chink, is that you?

>>27706533
No, that's Autie.

No joke that's pretty much my life.

>>27706510
You are asian. It does not count then. You are the exception not the rule.

>>27706622
Westerners struggling with learning.

non-yellowfags go die.

Recommend me the best HIE's with the most drama.

>>27706647
>>27705243

>>27706510
Whatever. I still have no idea what i do wrong and nobody told me before. I dont want a full list just tell me. Do i write the words wrong or is it the sentence formig?

>>27706668
It's spelling and punctuation. In other words, you're missing punctuation marks as well as some letters in some of the words,.

>>27706668
Syntax is correct, work on grammar, like capitalization and not forgetting letters.

>>27706692
I can live with that. Anyway, i still have 9 more years to be as good as you are now.

>>27706729
I'm not the guy you were replying to, I just thought I might as well answer your question.

>>27706743
Oh, thanks then. Sorry, i tought the chinese guy answered.

>>27706768
We're not all General Tso.

Well, i got what i came for so its time to leave. I was called an autist, i was told my life is worthless and somebody pointed out im not perfect at english in the process, but at least i got some feedback.

>>27706828
You don't need to announce the fact that you're leaving and that we hurt your feelings.
Just go.

>>27706828
>I was called an autist, i was told my life is worthless and somebody pointed out im not perfect at english in the process, but at least i got some feedback.
Fimfiction logo on this quote, anyone?

>>27706828
To be honest, if you're trying to learn English, then just write whatever; the plot doesn't matter if you're just improving your language skills. If you want to write a good story, then just stick to you native language; there's no reason to switch over to English and unless you become fluent in it, it'll show in your writing.

>>27707024
If he wants to learn English, he should read instead.

>>27707053
Well, that too, but writing is also a good way to gain familiarity with a language, especially if one plans on eventually writing in that language. Sort of like the difference between listening and speaking a language.

>>27707024
It's useless to write in your native language if nobody in the pony fandom will read it then.

>>27707214
Only if you write for fame. I'm of the opinion that you should write for yourself first, and if fame comes to you, enjoy it, but if not, be content with what you've created.

Then again, that's just me. I dunno what other people's motivations are.

>>27707231
There is no point to writing for me if nobody reads it. That hasn't to do with fame, it's because I want to achieve something in people with what I create. There's no point in creating it for me otherwise.

But I haven't published anything publicly yet. Only drawings, so I know it from that.

>>27707333
>he doesn't keep tons of unpublished documents in various stages of completion
>he doesn't have much more unpublished text than published

>>27707367
Uh, that's exactly what I said. I haven't published anything yet. Anything I've so far written is on my harddisks.