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Subjugation Friday #4

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>What is this thread about?
This thread is centered on stories about ponies being enslaved. Every kind of theme is welcome.

>I want to write my own story but I'm new to writing.
Check out these guides:
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pastebin.com/g4VpEg4f (clop specific)

>Where do the writers hang out?
Head over to www.rizon.net/chat with the channel name #slavepone. If you're ever having a writer's block or need advice, that is the place to go!

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Ponies enslaved by ponies, tragic, really.
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>>27480609
>Dash is unsure how to feel about the naked fillypussy grinding against her bare back
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>>27480609
Ponies should enslave zebras to serve as mounts.
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>Fluttershy has been bought by a very nice elderly couple.
>They needed help and found the slave auctions.
>They felt bad for the pour dear, who was openly crying on the platform.
>They bring Fluttershy to their home.
>They live in a small town in the middle of nowhere.
>Fluttershy likes the old lady, she treats her so nicely.
>They gave her a nice warm bed.
>The old lady holds her on the nights when she has a break down.
>The old man isn't mean, but thinks Fluttershy is a bit of a cry baby.
>Though their is one problem.
>Then couple need help with their business.

>They run the town's butcher shop.

>Fluttershy is given the job of preparing some of the produce.
>She understands that the animals here aren't like the ones back home.
>She still gags every time she has to behead a chicken.
>She flinches when she brings the carving knife down on what looks like a skinned cow's leg and cuts off chunks to the customer's requests.
>She vomits every night before bed.

>This morning is the worst.

>She has to cut and cook a stake.

>She unwraps the wax paper from the slab she pulled from the fridge.

>This chunk still has the skin and fur on it.

>And on the fur is a Cutie Mark.
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>thread theme song
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m0dnWnXPye4
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>>27480637

>Fluttershy stared at the slab of meat on the counter before her.
>The color slowly drained from her face.
>She was completely locked, frozen in time, staring at the stake.
>Tears started to well up into her eyes.
>Her eyes rolled up into the back of her head.
>She was unconscious before her body hit the floor with a loud meaty thud.


>"...Flutter...shy...Fluttershy?"
>Fluttershy slowly came to. The first thing she felt was the soft blanket under her.
>Then she realized someone was saying her name.
>"Fluttershy?"
"Mrs. Nonny?"
>Oh, Fluttershy, Are you okay?
"I... what happened?"
>"You fainted, dear..."
"I Fainted...?"

>"Are you feeling well? Do you think you can get up?"
>Fluttershy nods and rolls off of the bed onto her hooves.
>"There you go. Now I'm sorry, but we have to get back to work, okay?"
"Okay." Fluttershy squeaks.
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>>27480628
Or maybe griffons
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>>27480646

>On shaking hooves, Fluttershy makes it back into the cold room.
Stepping into the fridge, she glances at the skinned cow legs hanging from hooks, she soon realizes that these legs are nearly the same size and shape as her own rear legs.
>She shudders at the reminder.
>She steps over to the slab of meat still on the counter where she fainted.
>The cutie mark was still their.
>As she stepped closer, the tears returned.
>She looked over the finely groomed white fur on the meat.
>She ran a hoof over the fur, petting it, it was still soft.
>If it wasn't' so cold, and laying on a metal counter, she would have thought that the pony was still their, attached to it.
>She sniffed and wiped the tears out of her eye as she slowly picked up her carving knife, she carefully starts to trim the skin away from the meat, like the many times she has before.
>She sets the skin aside and cuts the meat up into smaller steaks, she grabs a small metal tray and scoops the steaks onto it.
>After trotting to the kitchen near the front of the store, she set the steaks in a pan on the grill, too cook them for the customer.
>The putrid stink of burning flesh stings her eyes.

>She looks over the counter to the customer, a tall man with a friendly warm smile.
"H-how would you like it cooked, sir?"
>"Well, medium rare, if you don't mine."
>Fluttershy halted at that, only for a few nano seconds at the request before replying.
"S-sure thing sir." She said with a mask of a smile. "Medium r-rare steak, coming right up!"


>After serving the man and placing the money in the register, the Pegasus trotted back to the counter.
>She carefully lifted the skin off the counter and placed it into a zip lock bag.
>She took the stairs up to her apartments and trotted to the fridge in her bedroom.
>Opening it, she placed the cutie mark in the fridge with the rest of them.


>She almost feels lucky to only recognize a few of the cutie marks.
>Almost.
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>>27480637
>>27480646
you know, we can still see this in the last thread, you really don't need to repost it.
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>>27480647
Pony riding a Zebra riding a Griffon riding a Dragon.
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>>27480678
Damn, that's a lot of mounts mounting mounts
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>>27480593
Who is the artist? That's a really nice sketch.
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The ponies are to protect and make them happy.

Message paid by the Lodge of the White Knights; there is always a White Knight in you
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>>27480986
She will learn to be happy. As my slave.
She will learn to crave my cum and be grateful for every chance she gets to eat it.
She will learn to enjoy licking my balls and ass.
She will learn to enjoy being whipped when she's a naughty little pony, and thank me with a smile with each lash.
She will reach a point where she wants nothing more than to please me by whatever means necessary, and she will want no other life than to be my property - to be separated from me will be a fate, in her eyes, worse than death.
And then, when she can't live without me, I will do her the ultimate cruelty of setting her free.
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Isn't this supposed to be a sunday thing?
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>>27481131
what? this thread is up 24/7
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>>27481131
And yet you're here.
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>>27479694
someone needs to lengthen that horses neck. fluttershy here is a longer legged horse than in the show, and needs a long neck to compensate in order to reach the ground and graze.

As for riding children, if that girl is 9-12 she should be something like 60-70% of her full height, yet she seems much younger, maybe 5. hard to write about an interesting lil girl if she is that young and stupid
>>27479029
sorry, until I get a job i'm on haitus.
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>>27480659
>>27480646
>>27480637
why did you transfer this? this is awful. I would literally rather read about fluttershy grappling with knowing she will be butchered for meat than this hellride.
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What happened to that story about the rich parent's buying a boy Pinkie?
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>>27481315
The anon writing it got hit with a ban during one of Scruffy's tantrums and hasn't been back since.
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stealth mode
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>Be Silver Spoon.
>Young filly, stuck in a kennel like a mangy dog.
>Those stupid humans took you away from your mom and dad.
>They didn't have to hit your mom that hard, did they?

> Or... dad...

>You wipe the tears from your eyes.
>Now's not the time to look weak in front of these stupid monkeys.
>Why, if you weren't in this stupid cage in this stupid pet store you'd-!
>You raised your hoof to strike the plastic floor of your kennel.
>Oh what's the point.
>You set your hoof back down, you wipe your tears before laying back down your arms, providing the only comfort in this tiny plastic cell.

>The bell at the store's entrance rings, telling you that more annoying small humans were here to poke and prod you with their weird claws, or, petting, is what they call it.
>They can't keep their paws off of you.
>You adjust your glasses on your nose to see the approaching bipedal rodents.
>They don't fit as good as they used too, but at least the crack only slightly obscures your vision.

>The monkeys, or, Hyoomans as they like to call themselves get closer, walking down the isle.
>The tall one, a human mare, with long yellow hair, guiding a human filly.
>This filly is different.
>She's quiet, and looking at the animals, instead of poking at them with her claws like normal.
>She stops when she sees you.

>She stands still and stares.
>Her mother looks at her daughter, and watches quietly.
>"Mom, Why is this pony so sad?"

>That caused your breath to catch in your throat.
>The mother looks at you, she kneels down to get a better look at you, she wears a saddened expression.
>"I don't know, why don't you ask?"

>You tense up.
>This is strange.
>Humans can't have emotions, can they?
>With the way the little one looks at you, you're almost fooled.

>"Eh-excuse me? Uhm, why are you so sad?"

>You don't know what to say, you're shocked into silence.
>But the kindness in the girl's eyes makes you break down and start crying aloud.
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>>27481570
>littlegirl
>buying a horsie
>keeps her as a pet
>learns to treat pony slaves well.
>rehab spoon
MY BODY IS SUPREMELY READY.
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>>27481570

"I... I miss my mom... and dad..." You sob loudly.

>The filly and mare look at you with a sad eyes.
>The mother stands up and walks away.
>The little one steps closer, she places her hand on the front of the kennel.
>"Y-your...? What happened?"

>You suddenly see red and lean your face against the cage door as hard as you can.
"You stupid humans! You hurt them! You hurt my friends!" You slump, its no use. "And... now their all gone... and I'm alone..."
>You tuck your face down into your arms and cry, your fur absorbing the tears, but not fast enough to hide them.

>The mother comes back, she has a leash and a plastic bag.
>A man steps into view next to the mother, you recognize him as the store owner.
>He looks at you with an annoyed, disproving look.

>"Well? Are you going to unlock it or not?" The mother asks the clerk.
>"Right, sorry." He puts a key into the a lock and you hear a click as chains come loose and they click as they are dragged around the top of the kennel.

>"Mom? Really?" The girl asked.
>The mom just nods and you feel your world start to move.
>"Come on Jenny, lets get in the car." You hear the mother's voice from above as the door to the store moves into view and moves closer.
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>>27481480
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>>27481733
>>27481570
its happening
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>>27481733
Too bad its 3am here and Im falling asleep on my keyboard.
I feel its gonna be an interesting green youre writting there and ill read it first thing in the morning.
keep on and goodnight.
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>Moondancer stood, naked, chained, humiliated at the hands of her captor
>At the auction she'd be sold
>"Up next, we have a unicorn mare named Moondancer who has antisocial tendencies." the auctioneer called out
>She kept her gaze downward, afraid to meet the crowd
>"40." a voice in the crowd called out
>"45."
>"60."
>"... 80."
>"100."
>"..."
>"And Moondancer, for 100 whopping dollars goes out to the gentleman up front." the auctioneer says
>Moondancer is hastily ushered from the stage and into the arms of the man who spent $100
>His groping hands feel up the pony's body
>Moondancer whimpered, her magic was useless
>How could this happen?
>Where was the justness in the world?
>Her thoughts were catatonic
>"I've always wanted a little pony all to myself." he grinned, pressing his face into Moondancer's chest and getting a deep draught of her scent
>She had a leash put on her and was set on the ground
>No amount of pushing or pulling would free her from the man's vise-like grip
>A man approached to intercept them in the parking lot
>A man wearing a green bodysuit
>His face was flat aside from a painted question mark
>"That pony is mine... Roderick Esteves. Hand her over."
>"What? No, fuck off."
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>>27481944
go on.
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>>27481733

>The carriage ride was a little longer that you expected, but you're glad its over.
>Those things move way to fast, and being stuck in a plastic box poorly balanced an inch from the edge of the carriage's seat didn't help the motion sickness one bit.
>You'd almost be proud to admit that you only puked a little bit inside your mouth.

>"Welcome home pony!" The little girl shouts as her mother sets the kennel down inside somewhere in the house.
>Looks like a living room.
>The mother leans down and looks at you.

>"I'm going to let you out now, okay?" She triggers the latch on the cage door and swings it open.
>You back up to the back wall of the cage.
>"Look, we're not going to hurt you, this is your home now." The mother guides the girl back away from the kennel.
>The tall one sit's weird, crossing her legs, it looks painful.
>You shake your head to get you legs moving.
>After the long stressful journey to the front of the kennel, you carefully lift your hood over the lip of the cage and press it onto the carpet.
>You look down in shock. This has to be the single most softest thing in the world.
>You step the rest of the way out of the kennel and look around, it defiantly is a living room, though a pretty big one.
>A couch, two chairs, a coffee table, those are all normal, but for some reason, those were all facing a large black foggy mirror.
>You look around in awe, you've never seen walls so white.
>And out side a large window you can see the carriage sitting on a path that leads to a large path, all surrounded by green fields with some trees in the distance.
>You never would have thought of green fields of grass as such a beautiful sight. What with Ponyville being in surrounded with the stuff.

>"You're kinda dirt, Pony."

>And the reverence was gone.
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>>27482029
wash her, do it.
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>>27482029
>>You look around in awe, you've never seen walls so white.
i'm really liking this being her first interaction with human stuff, her sense of awe and confusion is refreshing.
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>>27482029

"I've been stuck in that box for months, and in case you didn't notice, it doesn't have a restroom."
>For some reason that only caused the girl to giggle.

>"Well then, I guess the first thing we need to do is give you a bath." the mother said.
>"Ooh! I wanna wash the Pony, mom!" The little girl was up, running for the leash set on the table, you didn't notice before.

>Luckily, the mom was faster than the girl.
>She stood up, and in a swift motion she scooped the girl off of the ground so quickly, the girl's feet kept running for a few seconds before going slack.
>"Awe, mom!"

>"Sorry, Jenny, but I don't want water all over the bathroom, I'll take her, you wait here and watch the TV."

>"Oh, fine." The girl, or, Jenny, as you've picked up on, relented as she was playfully dropped on the big soft couch.

>She leans down to you, a smile on her face.
>"Sorry, but she gets excited easily."

"Oh, um, no problem."

>"Now then, would you care for a bath?"

"Yes please."

>You follow the mother through the house, down a hallway and into the bathroom.
>Again, this room is big, or is it just because the people who used it were big?
>You see a sink, a toilet, and a bathtub.
>The woman leans down to the tub and twists some knobs to start the water running.

>"Do you like the water hot or cool?"
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>>27482227

"Oh, um, hot." You reply.

>She beacons you over to her, now next to the tub, you realize your eyes are barely over the rim, looking in.
>You hop your front hooves up to the side and rest your chest on the edge as you reach down to feel the water.
>You've never felt water this hot, outside the time your mother was cooking, and you accidentally set your hoof in a pot of boiling water.

"Ah...! Can you make it not so hot?"

>After a moment you feel it again, its still hot, but nice hot.
>Using your front hooves, you pull yourself forwards into the tub, but your rear is stopped.
>You look back to see that you can't get your hind legs over the side.
>You look up at the woman with an embarrassed blush.

"Cou-could you um...?"

>With a giggle, she grabs your body just above the hips
>Her hands are so warm, and nearly wrap around your whole waste.
>She carefully lifts you into the water, letting your acclimate to the water temperature.
>You look up to thank her, but you're stopped by the look she's giving you.
>Its like she's seen a ghost.

>"When was the last time you've eaten?"

>Only now, that you're out of that box and in proper lighting do you see how thin you've become.
>You run a hoof down your side, feeling the rib bones of your barrel.

"O-only a week or so, not that long ago."

>The lady was visibly angered and saddened by that.
>"Well, now that you're living under my roof, you're going to eat dinner every day, got it?"
>The mock sternness is only broken by the light in her eyes.

"Y-yes ma'am."
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>>27481109
>I will do her the ultimate cruelty of setting her free
dude, thats deep
I'd read it
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>>27482308

>"Now then, its still bath time."

>She kneels by the side of the tub and starts working the warm water into your mane and back.
>You can feel it working into your cramped muscles from being stuck in that box.
>You hum in approval as she scoops more water up and runs it down your sides.

>You jump a little as you feel ice running down you spine.

>"Sorry, I know it's cold."

>You feel the clumps in your fur star to melt away as she works the shampoo into your coat.
>Her hands rub a little harder at certain spots, loosening the muscles, and making you melt.
>You feel her pour more shampoo into your mane.
>Her fingers are magic, you yelp a little as she works at your knotted mane, working slowly down to your scalp.
>Her fingernails scratching lovely, making your fur stand on end.

>And your tail.

>You blush, and will your tail back down against your rump.
"Ooh... yeah... I've needed this..."

>She lets out a pleased hum as her hands start to scrub down your neck.
>"Turn around please." You turn to face her, eyes closed in enjoyment. "And sit back so I can clean that tummy of your's."
>You comply without a thought.
>Rolling your hips forward and leaning your back against the side of the tub.

>You sigh in delight as those wonderful hands continue scrubbing your neck, under your chin.
>She begins to work down your chest, scrubbing the soft tuft, freeing all the trapped dirt and rinsing it away with a splash of water.
>You can feel her scrubbing and working away the caked on dirt and sweat stuck to the short hairs of your belly.
>You try not to giggle, but fail.

>She reaches for a rag and dips it in the soapy water.
>You feel the rag digging into the grime, finally getting through the gross gunk.
>She pulls the rag up and wrings the water out, then squirts a glob of shampoo into it and works it to a foam.
>The soapy rag rubs at your flat belly and the tender protrusions.
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>>27468038
how are we on the receiving end of green of this grammatical condition without pissing and moaning and throwing insults left and right? is this even 4chan anymore?

interesting so far, still reading
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>>27482510

>When the leased moan escapes, your push her hand to stop her.
"Ooh, careful, that's, up, I have tender teats."

>"Oh," The mother blushes. "I'll just let you wash that area."

"Th-thank you."

>She hands you the rag and starts working the knots out of your tail.
>You try to stifle a moan as you tugs your tail as you scrub your crotch with the soapy rag.
>Your eyes are half closed as you look into her eyes while she works, her pulls on the stubborn hairs tugging your tail occasionally.
>You bite your lip as she finishes and leans back.

>"Okay, now stand back up so we can finish up."

>She pulls the drain plug and starts the water again to run clean water over your body.
>You watch as your coat goes from a dusty brown to a bright shiny grey.

"Mm, thank you, it feels so good to be clean again. You do a twirl in the shallow water."

>She smiles at your happiness and lifts you out of the tub.
>You yelp, but it's muffled by the towel suddenly covering your eyes then it moves rappidly, scrubbing the water out of your coat.
>You happen to see yourself in the mirror, you look like a big fuzz ball.
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>>27482308
>>Her hands are so warm, and nearly wrap around your whole waste.
this should be waist, spoons.
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>>27482624
>"Ooh, careful, that's, up,
wat
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>>27482678
*um
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>>27482669
chan could use an edit button for typos.
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>>27482624
enjoyed thoroughly. though spoons feels a bit too happy at this point, you would have to release flesh eating beetles into my house before I seriously started marking it down.
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>>27482707
Nah, she's probably just happy to be out of that kennel.
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>>27481570
Great Begin
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>Be working on a story where Anon buys his daughter a pony
>Another anon comes into the thread with the same premise and blows me out of the water.
>Does literally everything better and faster.

Shit, good work dude. I'm loving every post. Keep it up.

I'll post mine tomorrow, but you've set a fucking high ass bar.

It's probably just two cakes syndrome anyway.
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>>27482624

>After drying off, the woman ran a comb through your coat to get it to lay down.
>Once your coat was straight, she lead you to the kitchen.

>"So, what are you hungry for?" She opened a large metal door showing a world full of food.
>You feel crisp cold air rolling out of the magic box.

"Oh, um... anything really." You notice some blocks of pink and red stuff wrapped in plastic. "Anything but meat."

>"Hmm... how about peanut-butter and jelly sandwich?"
>Your eyes lit up and you mumbled out a whispered yes before you could think.

"I, ahem, I mean, y-yes, please."

>No longer transfixed by the icebox, you look around the kitchen.
>Most of the counters are to tall to see the tops of, but you can see an oven and a sink.
>This kitchen looks surprisingly familiar.
>You some how were expecting to see more fancy machines.
>And, for some reason, a whole lot more chrome.
>You spot the kitchen table and make your way over.
>Pulling out a chair and hopping up, to watch her work.
>You can now see above the counters and spot something tantalizing.

>I great big cookie jar sitting atop the icebox.
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>>27483048
I'm winging ever line of it, and am probably doomed to hit a wall at some point.
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>>27483110
That's how the best stories are made.
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>>27483092
>A great big cookie jar sitting atop the icebox.
HO DON'T DO IT
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>>27482624
"Mm, thank you, it feels so good to be clean again. You do a twirl in the shallow water."

Interesting story so far, but that little mistake made me giggle a bit too much.
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>>27483092
>>27482624
>>27482510
>>27482308
>>27482227
>>27482029
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Pissy Gilda the pet griffon story when?
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>>27483163
Continued from pastebin.
http://pastebin.com/57zva1Ak
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>"Recon what normal people are doing right now on a Friday night"you say out loud with a big grin"Probably playing video games,hanging with friends or family or even going on a date".
>But not you.
>Because currently you were walking home with a pony in your arms in the middle of the cold night.
>You must of been a sight to see if it wasn't so dark
>Looking back on your day you would of said that it was exiting
>You won a pony at the fair,you outran the cops,you jumped off a mountain and got a good deal on a truck even if it is going to bite you on the ass later on.
"Man" you sigh content with your current situation
"I reckon what i'll do tomorrow" you say as you walk onto your street.

(Small taste to see if this works out)
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Skittles-clone GlimGlam when?
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>>27483200
>Upon reaching your house you immediately used your left hand to pull out your keys to unlock your front door because your right was currently trying to keep the pony on your shoulder from falling off.
>After you unlock the door you use your left hand to open your door so you can go.
>Tired beyond belief you simply drop dinky on the couch not even caring anymore while you take off the hat and coat you stole.
>Not even bothering with the rest of your clothing you drooped dead on your bed where you instantly fell asleep not even caring that your front door was open.
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>tfw when you reread you green and you realize that you forgot to fix your mistakes
>tfw you posted them and you can't fix them now
>that your a shitty writer.
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>>27483409
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>>27483409
you're*
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reminder that mare is for whipping and stallion is for riding
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>>27481944
>"Up next, we have a unicorn mare named Moondancer who has antisocial tendencies."
Wow, what a great salesman this guy is.
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>>27483092

>You smell something amazing just below your nose.
>A figure moves into your field of vision, snapping you out of your longed staring.
>You shake your head and look up at her.

"S-sorry, what?"

>"I asked, "what's your name"?"

"Oh, right. My name's Silver Spoon."

>You hold out a hoof to bump, your's startled when your hoof is grabbed and shook up and down.

>"Nice to meet you, my name's Janice, but you can call me Janny."

>You quietly nod, that amazing smell is back.
>You look down, oh, right, the sandwich.
>You carefully pick it up and take a bite.

>Its like an orgasm in your mouth.

>Well, compared to cold dry grain and dead grass since you've been captive.

>The bred is perfectly toasted, the peanut-butter is chunky, with the satisfying crunch of peanuts, and strawberry jam, sweet with large slices of strawberries adding a different satisfying crunch, almost juicy.

>You feel your eyes sting as tears start to roll down your cheeks.
>"Are you okay?"
>You start to reply, but then remember your mouthful.
>You chew slowly to savor the flavors as you nod your head.

>"Mom, can I have a sandwich too?"

>You're startled slightly by the sudden appearance of Jenny sitting next to you in her own chair.
>Almost as if summoned, you hear the toaster pop.
>"Sure thing, honey."
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>>27483478
I'd buy that.
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>Wake up and get out of bed
>Go to pony-themed bathroom and look at yourself in the mirror
>5' 11", middle-aged, morbidly obese
>You're probably Corpulent Brony
>Roll into industrial shower lift and command maids to pressure wash your rolls
>Throw a wad of $20's into the gas tank of your gold-plated travel crane and head off to the pony auction
>The purple one you've had your wall-eyed sights on is up for bid
>Starting bid is $300
>Bid $20,000 because you're rich and impatient
>You waste no time in getting your prize home and commanding your servants to throw her on your bed because you got winded walking to the door
"Waaahh! What are we gonna do on the bed, Master?"
>Say nothing and belly flop onto the bed with enough force to shake the earth to it's very core
>Volcanoes erupt in various parts of the world
>You roar a corpulent roar and dive face first onto the thing you most desire
>Twilight Sparkle's gigantic, magnificent, throbbing, mare penis
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>>27483409
>tfw you can't spell a signal goddamn sentence without misspelling the word or using the wrong grammar.
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>>27483627

Dude, what is your problem?

>$300

Are you serious with this shit?

That's way to much for a pony slave.
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>>27483639
Single*
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>>27480609
I don't get why Dash is all splayed out like that. Applebloom would be nothing for her to carry, considering she's carried 4 adult ponies while flying before.
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>>27483671
She looks more embarrassed than over loaded.

Then again, Earth Ponies are heavy.
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>>27483684
Its all them apple-flavored carbs
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>>27483671
AB jumped on without warning, so Dash wasn't prepared for the sudden extra weight of a rider and so lost her footing for a moment.
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>>27483684
>>27483701
But she's wearing a bridle. Shouldn't she have been expecting a rider?
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>>27483717
She's also extremely aroused and doesn't want anyone to know.
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>>27483720
>>27480618
I'd be aroused too.
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>>27483740
>tfw you will never be a filly's riding slave
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>>27483817
>>27483740
You know, there was an episode where Pinkie Pie was wearing spurs. What the fuck do ponies need spurs for? That must be some pretty kinky shit for them.
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>>27483837
How else are you supposed to tell your taxi driver to run faster if you don't kick him in the back of the head, genius?
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>>27483817
Oh god, the fillies are enslaving other fillies now!
WE COULD HAVE STOPPED IT, BUT NOW IT'S TOO LATE
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>>27480593
>This thread is centered on stories about ponies being enslaved. Every kind of theme is welcome.
What the hell is wrong with you people?
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>>27483639
>misspelling a word
FTFY
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I want to buy a bunch of newly arrived fillies before anyone else has gotten to them and treat them as if they were my daughterus and homeschool them.
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>>27484258
Pony is for riding, Anon
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>>27483521
seconding
>>27483092
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>>27484258
Read some of the green and find out.
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>>27483521
>the peanut-butter is chunky
fuckin pleb, l2smooth PB
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>>27483367
>*BEAP* *BEAP* *BOOP*
"It's a Goddamn Saturday"you mutter as you slam the mute button on the alarm
>Slowly you begin to awaken from your slumber feeling more and more sore as you do so.
>You begin stretching as you get out your bed
>After stretching you slowly begin your morning activities.
>After eleven minuets of doing your morning routine witch mostly consisted of shiting,shaving and showering
>You feel bright eyed and bushy tailed after getting your routine over with and you now feel ready to take on the day.
>But first you need some breakfast.
>Walking over to the kitchen you decide to have some butter toast to start off your day.
>Grabbing the necessary ingredients witch mostly consisted of toast,butter and a spoon.
>You grab the toast and carefully begin spreading butter on the toast using the backside of the spoon you grabbed earlier.
>When your finished smearing the butter you grab your ten year old toaster and stuff the piece of bread inside to cook.
>It would most likely take a minute cooking so you went to your bedroom to chill with your desk computer.
>Upon looking at your monitor you see that a tab on YouTube was still open.
>Deciding to see what it was you decided to take a look to burn some time.
>So you putting on your headset and begin watching not sure what else to do
https://youtu.be/otcEXAE6rn0?t=1320
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>>27483521

>You quietly ate your sandwich while Jenny ate hers, bouncing in her seat.
>You would occasionally glance at Jenny out the corner of her eye.
>She was blatantly staring at you, curiosity in her eyes.
>Janny had begun washing the dishes.
>Glancing out the window it was hard to gauge the time, but a safe guess was around two in the afternoon.
>You would also catch Janny stealing glances at you.

>The silence was beginning to suffocate you.

"So.. um..."

>You set your sandwich on your plate.
>Jenny seems eager to hear anything you have to say.
>You hold your hoof out to her.

"My name is Silver Spoon, what's yours?"

>"My name is Jenifer." She grabs your hoof and shakes it giddily.

>Her happiness is infectious.

>And so were her sticky fingers, you note, looking at the jelly stuck in your fur around your hoof.

>Yet you can't find it in you to be upset.
>You giggle and point a her, somehow Jenny managed to get jelly all over her hands and mouth.
>Jenny looks at herself and joins in the laughter.
>"Oops, look like I made a bit of a mess."
>You both finish your sandwiches, Jenny hops down and walks over to the sink by her mom and washes her hands.
>You decide its best to follow the lead and trot over to join them, mostly to get the jelly out of your fur before it dries.
>After a quick scrub Jenny walks back to the living room, you look up and Janny.

"So, um... is there anything you wanted me to do?"

>"Mm, no, not really."

"B-but aren't I your um... sl-"

>You were cut off by a finger over your mouth.

>"Nuh uh, none of that." Janny looked at you sternly. "While yes, legally, I do own you, but I promise you I don't want you as a slave."

"Then why did you buy me?"

>"Because I couldn't stand the idea of you winding up in the hands of someone who would use you as a slave."

"Oh... well, thank you."

>Janny leans down and gives you a tight hug. "You're welcome."

>You can't help but hug her back and cry into her chest, pressing your head up under her chin.
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>>27484773
>So you put on your headset
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>>27484798
just stop
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>>27484798
Why?
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>>27484891
Ignore him>>27484887
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>>27484894
Okay
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>>27482771
she is still away from her family and owned by creatures she sees as violent and enslaving her race directly. trust just isn't earned that quickly. it can be glossed over becuase you want the tone to be bright but it's still not the logical outcome, it's the idealized one.
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>>27484780

>Janny lets go and stands up, you wipe your tears and clear your throat.
>"Will you be alright?"
>You nod.
>"Okay, you go sit in the front room with Jenny, I have to get dinner started."

>You walk slowly back to the living room, taking your time calm yourself.
>You hear voices coming from up ahead.
>As you step back into the living room, your attention is immediately drawn to the big mirror thing.
>Some sort of strange play is on, a drawing of a bird is being chased through a desert by some kind of dog looking thing.

>Jenny laughs when the dog ran of a cliff, not to fall until after he looked down.
>You can't help but laugh at the strange sounds.
>You pull yourself up onto the couch next to Jenny to watch the strange play.
>Looking around the living room.
>You see some family pictures on the wall, you can see the front door.you think about trying to escape, maybe find a way back home.
>You see the kennel you spent the last seven months in.
>If you try to run away, they'd stick you back in the box.
>It's what the owner of the store did each time he let you out to clean your cage.

>He stopped cleaning your cage after the fifth escape attempt.
>You made it two blocks that time too.

>With a sigh you lay on your belly with your legs curled under you, your head resting on the couch arm.
>This is so much more comfy than that plastic box.
>Your eyes slowly grow heavy, you need to close them for just a minute.

>What a soft couch.
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>>27484895
Ignore him>>27484894
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>>27484773
Too many witches, too spoopy for me.
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>>27484895
Listen to this guy>>27485220
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>>27483650
I'm a poorfag, but I would be willing to pay much more than 300$ to buy a cute futa-twi. Food and shelter are secondary problems anyway.
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>>27488943
>be poorfag
>buy slave pone
>cant afford food for pone and i
>be forced to sell pone to autist to survive
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>>27483650
If people are willing to drop thousands on a life size pony plush, they're probably willing to spend that much on a living pony slave.
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>>27488943
>>27488975
>be poorfag
>you spend all your money on a pone
>someone to care for
>someone to laugh with
>someone to cry with
>bills start piling up, expenses rise
>you don't have electricity nor running water anymore
>you could sell pone, it would lower expenses, it could help you get back on your feet
>but you refuse
>you refuse to sell your friend to get the little comfort you had back
>because it's better to live on the streets together than alone in this house
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>>27485139
This is adorable.
We needed some nice things happening to Silver Spoon in this general.
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>>27484304
This is theme for other thread, but the idea is perfect
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>>27484305
>"Shush!"
>The slaves do not protest!
>A complaint more and you spend the same as your friend the blue pegasus!
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>>27488975
Never !
Now that we are together, we will stay together - even in death !
Her death.
Because ponies are on the "edible in emergency" list.
This way, she will be forever part of me.
That's what she would've wanted.
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Continuing from pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/DNvbjnQG

>the sun is shining bright straight onto your closed eyelids
>too bright
>you rather move your head to the side, so you won't have to open them
>judging by the pressure on your chest, Sarah must be still by your side, so everything's cool
>but you still move your hand, feeling her fur, just to be sure
>soft as always
>but your head feels somehow dizzy
>were you even sleeping though?
>it didn't really feel like ordinary waking up
>more like waking up from some sort of coma or unconsciousness
>wait
>you open your eyes wide
>this isn't the hill you fell asleep on
>there's a dusty road in front of you and some trees
>suddenly something touches your shoulder from behind
„Waaaah!“
>you quickly turn around, almost dropping Sarah
>>“Ooops, I didn't mean to scare you, just that saw that you were…“
>of course you recognize that shy voice
>there's a Fluttershy standing just behind you
>and the rest of the mane six, along with Discord
„That's fine...“ you stutter
>>“See? They're fine of course! A little delay never killed anyone.“ says Discord with a smirk
>Twillight doesn't answer, but gives him an angry look
>then she turns to you, clears her throat and starts with a cheerful tone
>>“Welcome to Equestria, mister Anon.“
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I feel so dirty when I skip Klaff, Fireking, twiligh/tg, Lurkernon and Ephemeral's posts seeing how much you guys wait for them.
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>>27489517
Don't worry, you are not alone. Except on skipping Klaifferon
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>>27489517
>>27489604
Same for me except I also didn't like Skittles.
I'm ready for my flogging now.
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>>27489619
Serious question. Who? I'm newish to SPG.
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>>27489633
Whiteknight story about a Dash so broken she drank her master's piss because she thought it was expected of her.
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>>27489654
What the hell.
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>>27489517
>>27489604
>>27489619
>>27489633
Funny
Seems like we got a lot of new faces and new writefags around, despite all that happened.
I guess the lurkrate increased.
And people still remember the low tier, minor and 9B writefags, even though some went hiatus.
Im kinda moved
spg forever
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>>27489778
Writer died back in January.
Still the only unfinished story I'd come back and read in a heartbeat if I heard it was being picked up again.
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>>27485139

>The minute is over suddenly.
>Your head snaps up from the couch at the sound of some loud crashing.
>You're back in your home in Ponyville.
>You think about the weird dream.
>Stuck in some strange world with monkey people.
>You laugh at yourself.
>Monkey people.
>Yeah right.

>Their is another loud crash, you hear muffled yelling.

>You bolt upright to your hooves and dash out of the room towards the sounds.
>You come to the entry room of the house, the front door has been broken clean off of it's hinges, wood splinters everywhere.
>Heart thudding in your ears like war drums, you hear shouting down another hall, you bolt to the sound.
>You skid to a halt as your heart drops out of your tail.

>It's them!

>The monkey people!

>You see they have your mom and dad cornered, your dad is trying to stand brave in front of your mom.
>You can see their faces of horror, that you have come to the room where the monkeys are.
>They are all in matching uniforms, armed with strange weapons, and large burlap bags.
>One of them sees your parents see you, he turns to look.
>His greedy eyes light up in joy, his hideously tiny blue eyes.
>You turn to run away before he can grab you.
>His hand is already around your throat before you were able to take a step.
>You're lifted off of the ground without effort, your hooves kicking and swinging, but too short to do anything to the creature.

>"You let her go!"

>You've never heard your mother roar like that.
>You turn to see her already standing on the shoulders of another monkey with her forehead coming down in a mighty headbutt.
>She's subdued quickly by a club to the back of the head.
>Your father suffers a similar fate, the crack of the weapon striking his face ringing in your ears.

>The creatures laugh as dad is knocked out cold.

>The creatures pick your mom and dad up in the sacks before you're tossed into a bag, only to watch the blue eyed monkey grin as he cinches the bag closed.
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>>27489517
my updates are a little sporattic right now due to working on another story with someone else as well as me rewriting stuff that RM has written, but from my perspective I dont know about you guys but i'm enjoying the cross over that and real life is a butt

tl;dr: you probably havnt missed much
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>>27490854
what have I missed since January?
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>>27491104
a lot
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>>27489302
>be not caught up on green
>accidentally read one line
>"Welcome to Equestria"
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>>27486389
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>>27491104
Let's see; the big ones:
-There was another scruffening
-Scruffy started targeting us and SiM
-We tried to hide from scruffy
-Resulting confusion ended up with SiM thinking we were trying to take them over or something
-Massive flamewar between our generals
-Changed name to Subjugation (day of the week)
And here we are.

Also, you missed tons of green.
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>>27484305
>tfw no green about a senile old anon and his pony care-taker fighting to free ponies despite them earning their freedom years ago.
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>>27492803
is the caregiver also senile or does she not have the heart to tell the old man the truth?
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>>27492838
The latter, but she also wants to make sure Anon doesn't hurt anyone or himself by accident.
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>>27492838
The twist is, she's already told him, he just never remembers.
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Reminder not to break the pones, they're no good to anyone when they're severely damaged.
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what happens if you get a pone that loves being a slave
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>>27493376
Then you get Writeslut's story.
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>>27493349
>tfw no anoncolt to ride
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>>27493402
you get Writeslut's Skittles-clone


moar when
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>>27493553
>>tfw no anoncolt to ride your dick

FTFY
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>>27493654
>you will never be Shining Armor's big spoon
>you will never give your blushy stallion a reacharound to help him sleep
>you will never send him over the edge by chewing the base of his immaculate white ears with your moistened lips
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>>27493792
You're damn right I never will. Never with a stallion. Let me know if a colt comes up for sale.
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>>27493842
Aren't they all colts compared to us human anons, though?
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>>27490467

>You feel a rocking sensation.
>Something warm is rocking you from side to side.
>Your body decides to investigate, causing your eyes to slowly open.
>The first thing your eyes focus on is a face an inch from your own.

>With a panicked yelp, you press both hooves forward in an attempt to get away backwards.
>Your hooves contact something warm and squishy, a half second before your back collides with the floor.
>The jolt from your head hitting the floor, snaps you back to your nightmare.
>You take stock of the world around you.
>You're on your back, on the floor.
>Your breaths are fast and panicked.
>Instinct is telling you to find cover, just now noticing the human face looking at you from the couch you were once on.
>Flash backs hit you hard, in the next second you're on your hooves looking to hide.
>You dive into the dark space behind the couch, ducking into the far corner to make yourself as small as possible.
>The predators can't get you in here, you're safe.

>"What's all the commotion?" You hear a worried motherly voice ask.

"Mm-mom...?" Your whimper causes your body to shake harder, mind racing on adrenaline.

>"Mom, I think Silver Spoon was having a nightmare." You hear Jenny's voice say. "I tried to wake her up, but then she kicked me and ran away."

>"Where did she go?"

>A shuffling later and Janny's face comes into view at the end of the couch, a looking at your worriedly.

>"Silver Spoon? Are you alright?" Her voice is calm and light.

>It's a trap.
>It has to be a trap.
>You just kicked her daughter.
>The second she gets her hands on you, she's going to skin you alive.

>You shrink yourself as tightly as possible.
>You hope that by holding perfectly still, she won't be able to see you, and she'll lose interest.

>Or was that dragons?
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>>27493909
I'm getting hard for some reason
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>>27493909
This is getting more emotional reaction from me than any other green we've had. I want to pet the spoon and tell her everything is going to be okay.
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>>27493909
>>You hope that by holding perfectly still, she won't be able to see you, and she'll lose interest.
>
>>Or was that dragons?
im really enjoying this green, super cute.
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>>27493792
>anon died of massive cerebral trauma from the unicorn horn piercing his skull
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>>27494188
boner aside, im seconding this
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>>27494228
Nah, poor Shining got his horn cut off, Anon is trying to comfort him.
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>Myles walks back in the living room, with a plate of fried fish in his hand
>It's been almost another hour since the both of you found out about Gilda's little secret
>You and Gilda have been sitting in silence during that hour, with Gilda flipping through the channels on the T.V.
>And Myles has been cooking for the past hour
>Well
>"Cooking"
>You're pretty sure he was done thirty minutes ago--fried fish isn't that hard to cook
>From what you understand, anyway
>That, and you heard the microwave "ding" a minute or so ago
>You're sure he just needed some time to actually process the fact that you and him now own a talking animal
>Which is something you still can't get over
>And probably won't, for a long while
>In fact, for the hour you two were sitting on the couch, you didn't even want to speak to her
>For two reasons, really
>One, she just reminded you of a very, very embarrassing period of your life
>That you had just forgotten, up until the little shit reminded you of it
>Stupid piece of shit
>And two...
>It'd just be weird
>You wouldn't want to talk to her like this isn't something weird
>She's a damn bird-cat
>Catbird--er
>Griffon
>She's not supposed to talk
>At least, you don't think
>Throughout all your life, you've pretty much been taught that animals shouldn't talk
>That shit only happens in parallel universes and cartoons
>Not in real life
>Your friend gives his pet--can you even call her that now?--her food, with a brow raised
>"You like your fish fried?"
>Why the fuck is he so nonchalant about this?
>Yeah, sure, he did scream for... a good two minutes
>That was funny
>But
>Shit
>He talks as if he knew Gilda was always a talking cat--griffon
>Actually, no
>Fuck it
>She's a catbird
>Fuck her
>Gilda looked at the dish before her with a large smile
>"Holy shit, do I!"
>And she swipes the plate from him, quickly digging in
>Pig
>Catpig
>"Thanksh, mashter!"
>Why is she talking with her mouth fu--wait
>Wait
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>>27491104
>since january
good luck catching up.
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>>27494639
Finally a update.
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>>27494639
>Hold the fuck up
>...
>Master?
>Even Myles seems confused by this little nickname
>Catbird must be into some serious BDSM or something
>"Master?"
>He questions her, moving to sit on the armrest next to her
>As she swallowed, a look of shock grew on her face
>Pretty much a "I just fucked up" look
>"Huh?"
>She looks at Myles with curiosity
>Although, you're ninety-nine percent sure it's completely feigned
>She knows what she said
>Everybody heard it
>"You just called me Master."
>Or she could've called you Master
>...
>Actually, no, that's stupid
>She was talking to Myles, not you
>"What? No I didn't."
>Lying through her fucking beak
>"Yes you did--"
>"Dude, you sure your stupid girlfriend didn't say that?"
>Okay so now your eye is twitching
>God you hate this bird
>"One, she's not my girlfriend," you can't help but smile at that, "And two, I'm pretty sure you said that."
>Sighing, you cross your legs, resting your head on your hand
>Now that that little problem is explained--
>"You sure she's not your girlfriend? She's gotta be your wife then, right?"
>You swear to all that's mighty...
>Myles sighs as well
>"Me and Claire are not in a relationship, Gilda. If anything, we're friends--that's it."
>You cough
>He looks over to you, smirking
>"BEST friends. Nothing more, nothing less."
>There we go
>That's better
>"We're getting off track here," and his attention is right back to Gilda, "You called me Master--"
>"You must be hearing things, then, Ma--dude," she picks up whatever else is left on her plate and eats it
>Wait
>My dude?
>"My ears aren't fucked like Claire's--I /know/ what I heard."
"Low blow."
>"You're welcome, by the way."
>You sigh
"Yeah, yeah, whatever."
>You remember back when Myles took you to get your hearing fixed
>It had to be like, a year ago, almost
>It was so nice of him--he was so humble about it, too
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>>27494735
>You don't remember his exact words, but he said something along the lines of "I'm not gonna let you suffer like this. Shit, we got the money--there's no reason to not do this!"
>Also, there was something else to it, too
>Something along the lines of him getting annoyed by your reactions to the sounds
>By his tone at the time, though, you could tell this reasoning was merely secondary
>It had to be
>And shit, while you never formally thanked him for it, you're sure as hell thankful for it
>If he had never did that, you'd still be hearing these weird ass sounds every now and again
>...
>You're smiling again
>Genuinely
>Not that you don't smile genuinely most times
>It's just that kind of Myles-smile
>If that makes any sense
>Hey look, Gilda's finished with her food
>You'll just casually focus yourself back at the matters at hand
>Gilda really wants to keep to her little story
>"Maybe they're getting fucked, then. It happens to the best of us."
>You roll your eyes
>Myles was going to respond to this
>He was probably going to prove her wrong, like he does with you sometimes
>But then he realizes something, something you just realized, too
>She's not wrong
>While, sure, she's not right either
>There's not exactly a third party here to break this
>...
>Well, reliably break this, anyway
>You're not a reliable third party
>Thankfully, Myles knows this fact
>So, he doesn't bother bringing you up for the tiebreaker
>Sighing, he pinches the bridge of his nose
>"Ugh. Fine. I'll drop it,"
>And with that, he concedes
>He's used to doing that, though
>So doing it once more shouldn't be a problem
>"Thanks, Ma--dude."
>My dude
>That's the second time she's said that
>Obviously, she wants to say "Master"
>But as far as you and him are concerned, she's just saying "my dude"
>Saying it really awkwardly, at that
>...
>Oh who the fuck are you kidding?
>She's just interrupting herself so she doesn't say "Master" again
>Smart of her, but it's gonna bite her in the ass later on
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>>27494793
>You already know it is
>Shit like that never goes well
>But, you two will ignore it
>For now, anyway
>It'll pop up again later
>She's almost repeated her mistake twice now, there's no way it won't
>"I'll just ask you some questions, then."
>She just raises a brow at him
>"What kind of questions?"
>"Lots of 'em, really. Questions that range from who your last owner was, to what your favorite food is."
>She puts a claw to her chin
>Then, after a moment, she smirks
>"Alright. I'm perfectly fine with that."
>"Perfect! First ques--"
>"As long as I get something to eat, first."
>Excuse you?
>Did you just hear those words out of her mouth--er
>Beak?
>Looks like she's gonna need a quick throw down on the food rules that go around in here
"Ha, yeah, no."
>Swiftly, she turns her head to face you
>"Excuse me?"
>You smirk
"Nice try, Catbird, but that's not gonna roll here. You're not gonna eat again, not right after you literally just had your breakfast."
>She crosses her arms
>Chuckling, you continue
"Shit, you'll be lucky to get a snack in between breakfast, lunch, and dinner. And, if I remember correctly, you just HAD a snack. You'll be better off waiting those three hours until noon, Catbird."
>She's growling now
>And all you can do is smirk
>You've successfully laid down the rules, without the help of Myles
>Well, A rule, anyway
>And he was right there, the whole time, too!
>You bet he's looking at you with pride
>In fact, you take a look at Myles
>Just to make sure he's got that pride written all over his face
>The pride a Dad would have after his son just made the winning score in a football game or something
>You look to his face to search for the pride
>The pride you know he has
>...
>Weird
>You can't exactly find the pride there
>His face is mostly painted with uneasiness
>That, and a bit of concern
>That's weird
>Where's the pride?
>The pride you know he has!
>"Well, I wouldn't exactly say that, Claire..."
>...
>What?
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>>27494893
>His face goes back to a neutral, "let me explain" face
>Oh boy
>Your smirk immediately fades away at this look
>What's he gonna say now?
>"I mean, you're right and all, Claire, don't get me wrong. It's just that... I don't think her snack was really a "snack", in the traditional sense."
"What do you mean?"
>"I mean--well, you fed her, right?"
>You nod
>His eyes dart quickly towards the last cinnamon toast crunch piece on the floor
>Then back to you
>This son of a...
>You frown
>"You get what I'm getting at, right?"
"Fuck you."
>"Yeah, you do."
>Bastard's implying that you didn't feed her properly
>Which, in hindsight, you didn't
>But the thought from him still offends you
>He gets off the armrest, starting to walk towards the kitchen
>"It'll just be something small. A plate of chips, or something."
>"I like barbecue!"
>"Perfect."
>Perfect because that's all there is left in the house
>As he walks away, he goes over to where the little bit is and tosses it in the trash
>You stop paying attention to him after that
>Because you're now glaring at Gilda
>And she can't help but smirk at you
>"What was that about "waiting three hours", again? Didn't quite catch it the first time."
>Keep calm, Claire
>Keep calm
>You're not allowed to hurt her, remember?
>You said it yourself
>You can't go back on your word now!
>With a sigh, you just look back at Myles, who already has the plate of chips in his hand
>That was quick
"I fucking hate you, Gilda."
>"The resentment is mutual."
>"You two said somethin'?"
>Apparently, Myles had already walked into hearing distance
>You shake your head, and Gilda doesn't say a thing
>He shrugs it off, walking past Gilda and sitting on the armrest next to her again
>Gilda just takes the plate of chips from him, digging in
>Again
>Catpig
>Crossing his legs, Myles rests his hands on his knee
>You'd question this if you didn't already know that he's prone to feminine characteristics at times
>"Alright, Gilda, you comfy?"
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>>27494639
aww shiiieeet

its catbutt time
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>>27494957
>She looks up at him from her plate, nodding
>Then, she digs right back in
>Was she not just fucking fed? Jesus fucking Christ
>"Alrighty then! Lets start off with something simple--age. How old are you?"
>You and Myles are both twenty-six--only a day separating the both of you
>Funny, how both of you are also Geminis
>Some might say you two were destined to meet from the day you two were born
>You say that they're retarded and that all of this was of pure coincidence
>Gilda swallows the current wad of chewed chips in her mouth
>"Seventeen."
>She answers the question quickly, presumably so she can go back to stuffing her fa--what
>She's lying, right?
>There's no way she's /actually/ seventeen years old
>Myles shares the same shock you have, raising a brow at the answer
>Gilda eventually notices this and rolls her eyes, swallowing another handful of chips
>"Oh come on. That's only in griffon years! I'm sure I'm like, thirty-eight or whatever in your human years."
>"Ahem... Yeah, right."
>It takes him a bit before he thinks of another question
>"Okay, next question. How was the pet shop we got you at? It seemed like a shady place when we got there."
>For a split second you could've sworn you saw an inch of worry hit her face
>But, if it was there, it was only there shortly, as a more confident face took over
>"It was fine."
>It was silent for a moment, before Myles spoke up again
>"That's it? It was just... "fine"?"
>She only nodded
>Honestly, you expected her to say something more about the place
>She was wrapped up in restraints, after all
>"Okay then... Next quest--"
>"Listen, are all your questions gonna be boring like this? Because if they are, I can just sleep until noon."
>She eats some more chips
>Myles sighs, nodding
>"Alright then. I'll up the ante with this one."
>He pauses
>"I was planning to ease into this one, as it's a bit more personal, but since you're asking for it--"
>"Just ask the damn question already."
>Myles nods, sighing
>"Alright."
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>>27495124
>He pauses again, probably to get ready for the response to his next question
>"Do you miss your parents?"
>And just like that, she was frozen
>Much like you were, earlier
>The chips she had in her claw just fell back onto the plate, as she immediately looks to the floor
>You sigh
>Well, at least you two know that this is a touchy subject for her now
>He recoils at her depressed reaction almost immediately, shifting down to the couch to sit next to her
>He puts an arm around her and speaks to her softly, most likely in an attempt to comfort her
>This annoys you, for some reason
>"Wait, Gilda, I'm sorry. I didn't--"
>"No."
>Huh?
>Wait, did she just speak?
>She turns to look at him again
>"I don't miss 'em at all."
>Yes, yes she did
>That was...
>Unexpected
>You honestly didn't expect her to say anything
>You thought she was gonna stay silent, like she did when you two first got her
>Then she'd talk about it later
>Later being like, tomorrow, or something
>But no
>Your theory was crushed almost immediately
>She sighs, getting off the couch
>"I'm done answering these questions. Lets do something else."
>Her plate is empty
>What the fuck
>As Myles puts her plate on the living room table, he looks at her walk towards the kitchen with concern
>"I'm sorry."
>She stops, turning her head to look back at him
>"Sorry for what?"
>"The questions. I didn't mean for you to react like this."
>She simply scoffs
>"Really, that's what you're sorry for? Those questions weren't anything--I just don't feel like answering anymore if they're all gonna be like that."
"Like what?"
>You don't know why
>But you felt compelled to ask her that
>"Simple and boring. I'd rather not get asked another fifty of those, like I'm in some sort of boring interview."
>"Well," he pipes up again, "I'm just trying to get to know you. The guy who sold you to us didn't tell us much about you except for the fact that you're prone to violence."
>"Prone to violence?"
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>>27495251
>She does a little laugh before continuing on
>"Ha! That stupid fucker has no idea what the hell he's talking about--I'm not "prone to violence"."
"I'd beg to differ," you mutter
>"What was that?"
>She turns to you, brows furrowed
>You look at her, resting your head on your hand with your arm on the armrest to your left
"You heard me, Catbird. You seem like a pretty violent kitty, to me."
>She growls
"See? What kind of peaceful animal does that?"
>"Never said I was peaceful."
"But you just said that you're not prone to violence--doesn't that mean peaceful?"
>"No," she walks up to you, jumping off the ground to float in the air
>She does this so she can talk to you while staring you down
>"It just means that I'm not gonna claw your fucking face off for getting me angry. Kinda like now."
>You scoff, turning away from her
"That sounded pretty violent if you ask me."
>"I can get violent, if you want me to--"
>"Ladies," Myles immediately jumps in the middle of you two, possibly sensing a future confrontation
>And if he is, he's sure as hell not wrong
>"Please," he looks to you, "Chill," and then he looks to the Catbird, "Calm down. We're all family here--"
>"My only family is you, Ma--dude."
>He looks at you again, and you just roll your eyes
"I feel the same way Gilda feels, "mah dude"."
>She's growling again
>Somebody call animal control
>He sighs
>"Well, we all live in the same house--we at least HAVE to get along."
>He looks up at the flying bird and gives her a nice warm smile
>"If me and Claire can get along perfectly, then I'm sure it's possible that you and her can get along, as well."
>It could happen
>You don't foresee it happening, but it could very well happen--wait
>What the hell's he trying to say about you?
>Gilda starts to flutter to the ground, considering the idea of the walk
>You're surprised she's even considering it--one would think she'd disregard the idea completely
>Almost like how you're going to do it
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>>27484773

>Be dinky
>And you were starting to wake up
>You start to heave and stretch as you awaken
>After one yawn or two you finally open your eyes
>But as you open them you were greeted with a far more foreign sight than you were used to.
>"How did I get here" you wonder as you open your eyes
>But as you began wondering this question it all comes back like a flash flood.
>The fair,Anon and even the chase with the "cops" as anon called them
>You were taken aback for a second or two before regaining your composer
>Pushing everything that happened in the back of your mind you decide that you'll worry about that later
>After your memory came back you eventually come to the conclusion that this may be anon's home
>and with that reassuring thought you get up and begin exploring the strange home
>After some minuets of looking around you eventually stumble upon what looks like anon's kitchen
>looking around you soon see what looks like a toaster with smoke coming out the top
"He's probably cooking something" you think as you approach
>getting on your back hooves you reach your head over the counter
>And you bite the toast that was poking out of the top of the toaster
>And just as you get the toast you get back down and trot back to the room where you woke up
>Just as you sit down you began thinking about anon your new "Master"
"Of course you don't agree with the things anon did yesterday...but is did feel good seeing the human's getting what they deserved"You think to yourself
>"After all the humans did take everything from me and many other ponies" you think aggressively convincing yourself while remembering all those other ponies at that auction five years ago
>Just as you began to loose your cool you hear hoofsteps in the hallway
>But just as you get is a defensive position Anon comes around the corner still wearing the same clothing he wore yesterday minus the hat and coat.
>"Oh your awake"
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>>27495421
Hopefully *sigh* there's no grammar or spelling problems with this one.
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Because I said you'd get some today, here's some Wage Slave Berry Punch.

Con't from pastebin: http://pastebin.com/amhMYf99

>And that’s how you watch that movie.
>Buttershy’s head in your lap, a beer in your hand (because mixing drinks is fucking hard when there’s a pony jabbing you every time you move), and Berry Punch’s disapproving glare boring in to you.
>Either she’s jealous or she thinks you’re gonna take advantage of the tiniest otaku.
>”Gimme ‘nother, Anon.”
>Or she just wants you to mix her a drink.
>Which you can’t do.
>POKE.
>”Hush.”
“I didn’t –!”
>POKE.
>You give up.
>Like the narration up above says, that’s how you watch the rest of that movie.
>By the time the movie ends and Fluttershy finally sits the fuck up, your legs have gone numb.
>That’s probably why the damp spot on your lap is a complete and total surprise.
“Um… Fluttershy, did I… um…”
>”Sorry,” the mare mumbles. “I was crying.”
“Oh, thank fuck.”

>You try not to laugh.
>You fail.
“Ha! Anon, if you had to go to the bathroom, why didn’t you say anything?”
>Whatever. In for a bit, in for a lot of bits.
>”Shut up, Berry, and get me a towel or something or you know what?”
“Gotta go to the bathroom?”
>”No. Fuck pants. I’m home and home is a no-pants zone.”
>”Please don’t.”
>”What!?” Anon growls at the other mare. “Berry isn’t wearing any pants. You aren’t wearing any pants. Why should I have to wear pants?”
>Man has a point.

more tomorrow
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>>27495421
>you're

Other than that though, it's not too bad.
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>>27495320
Are you kill?
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>>27495320
>"What's in it for me?"
>"Well, while you two are out, I'll get started on lunch."
>As soon as his sentence ended, Gilda dashed to the door as if she were the roadrunner
>And, being the annoying cunt she is--
>"Come on, Claire! I'm not gonna wait all day for your ass!"
>...She rushes you
>Again, you hate her
>So much
>You don't move, however
>You're not persuaded by the idea of food like a stupid starving cat--you've got enough weight on you as is
>Myles takes notice of this, tilting his head to the side
>Huh
>That's a quirk you haven't seen him do in awhile
>"Aren't you going?"
>You just shake your head, crossing your arms
>He sighs
>"Really? Why the hell not?"
"You know exactly why I'm not going, fucker."
>At this, he just smiles
>You kind of wish he didn't
>"Oh come on. Are you saying you really can't Gilda for a little over thirty minutes?"
"I can barely take her for a minute--what makes you think I can suffer her for more that?"
>"Because you've dealt with much, much worse before."
>He's lying through his teeth
>...
>No he's not
>You wish he was
>But, again, he /is/ right about that
>All throughout high school, you've had to deal with cunts a lot crustier than this one
>And even a little bit after high school life, too
>While, Gilda is nothing you can't handle
>That doesn't mean you /want/ to handle her
>From what you've noticed already from the stupid catbird, she's an annoying little shit that's hiding a lot more than she really should
>Plus she's not a pony
>You bet a pony wouldn't act this annoying, even if it could talk
>It'd be nice to you
>It'd hug you, be a companion like no other
>Maybe you'd even have playful moments like Gilda and Myles did earlier
>But no
>Everything else just had to be expensive as hell
"Name one time."
>Despite the fact that you already know that he's right, you decide to challenge him
>Bastard couldn't possibly name an exact time--
>"Maya."
"Fuck you."
>He chuckles at this, putting his arm around you
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Any stories in this thread that don't involve Anon?
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>>27495512
>Spends five minuets rereading my green making sure I didn't fuck up.
TFW you forgot to fix "You're"

>it's not too bad.
Thanks i'm very glad you enjoyed it.
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>>27495562
Literally the one posted right above you.
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dang lots of great green recently, keep up the good work writefags. this is the most content these last few weeks than we've seen in months.
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>>27495585
Any more?
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>>27495585
Myles and Claire sure seem human to me.
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>>27495621
are you retarded
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>>27495636
Where does it mention them not being humans?
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>>27495649
>Any stories in this thread that don't involve Anon?
>that don't involve Anon?
>Anon
the characters in his story do not involve anon
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>>27495685
Then I'll be more specific:
Stories with no humans, regardless of their name(s).
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>>27495699
>You are Anonelf.
>Humans have been driven to extinction, which is good, because humans suck.
>On the downside, these pony things you are using as manual labor now just aren't very good at their jobs.
>"Here, Anonelf!" a little redheaded filly giggles, holding up a plate of candy. "I made thethe for you."
>You take it, because she's not allowed to have candy.
>And then you kick her, because fuck ponies.
>Lesser lifeforms deserve to suffer.
"Get back to work, Twist, or I'll have you flogged!"
>"Yeth, mathter!"
>Stupid thing trots off giggling.
>Fuck ponies.
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>>27495771
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>>27495771
literary gold.
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>>27495561
>"Maya?"
>Huh?
>Oh
>You forgot Gilda was even here
>You'll just ignore her, for now
>"From what you've told me, Claire, Maya was a lot worse than Gilda is."
>His caring smile makes you--involuntarily--smile
>Which causes you to look away from him
>You hate it when you smile like this
>"Spending an hour or two with Gilda isn't gonna kill you, Claire. You know it isn't."
"Or two?"
>"Or three, shit, it doesn't matter."
>You giggled at that
>Fucking hell, why did you giggle at that?
>"Point is, you two need to be fast friends. Like I said, we're all family here, and that's not gonna change any time soon. Not on my account, anyway."
>You finally decide it's time to look at him
>But before you do, you take a quick sigh
>But when you do look at him, the two of you share the same kind of smile
>You don't even know how to describe it
>The only word you actually /can/ describe with is...
>Well...
>Genuine
>And, after a moment's passing, both of you are chuckling like mad
>You don't even know /why/ you're laughing like this
>You just are
>Fuck
>The two of you laugh, chuckle, then giggle for a moment or
>But, eventually, it dies down
>And, audibly, Gilda groans
>You can't help but sigh
>Again, ignoring
>You stand, smirking at your friend
"Fine, fine. I'll take her out for a bit."
>"Thank you."
>He stands with you, ready to get back into the kitchen
"We'll be back before nine fifteen," you assure him before walking away
>His eyes quickly move from the cable box's clock, then back to you
>"But it's nine fourteen."
>All you do is chuckle some more
>And you hear him chuckle as well
>You reach the front door, actually smiling at Gilda, for once
"C'mon, you little shit. We've got time to kill until your precious food'll be done."
>The two of you walk out of the front door, but not before Gilda raises a brow
>"You wouldn't happen to have a leash and collar on you, would you?"
>...
>Excuse you, what?
>You simply glare at her, while she gives you this sheepish grin
>"What?"
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>>27495835
>You can't help but sigh, walking forward
>And the bird decides to fly alongside you
>This is gonna be a really long walk, isn't it?

To be continued... soon
Pastebin will be updated shortly
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>>27495699
We had a very brief story with Thunderlane in the Sombra-wins scenario. http://pastebin.com/UAvS592z

Honestly though, you might want to head over to SiM and poke through their pastebin. Some of their stuff is pure pone - usually Nightmare Moon-related.
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>>27495849
What made you decide to have both a man and a woman in your story?
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>>27495771
kek

>>27495851
I really like that one, thanks Anon.
SiM isn't really my bag though. They're more bondage than slavery.
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>>27495835
i both really like this and am really impatient for the whole slavery thing to come to light.
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>>27495892
The fact that I like duos, and the fact that it's rare to have anybody but one human all the time
So, fuck it, add another one in there. It couldn't hurt the plot, could it?
>>27495952
I gotchu next section my family
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>>27495421

>Be anon
>And you are going to check and see if your butter toast was done.
>You walk out of your bedroom and down the hall.
>And as you walk into your living room you see the pony you won yesterday or better known as dinky in a strange stance.
>But that's not all
>you also see what remains of your butter toast on the ground.
"Oh you're awake"you say not really showing any emotions in your statement.
>"What do you want from me"you hear her say in a aggressive voice.
"Whoa kid why the aggression" you say placing a hand on your heart acting like you were hurt.
>"I didn't ask that" you hear her say in a serious voice.
"I want you to spend the rest of your life with me as my loyal companion."you say in as a sarcastic tone as you could muster.
>"Whatever"you hear her say as she jumps onto the couch and lays down with her head propped up on the arm of the couch.
>Waiting a second or two you finally decide to say something.
"So....You gonna finish that"You say pointing to the half eaten piece of butter toast on the carpet.
>you see her moving her head just a little to see what your pointing at.
>"Probably not"you hear her say as she goes back to her original position.
"Sweet" you say as you bend down and pick up the piece of bread
>Before she can say anything you gobble up the whole remainder of the piece of bread
>"Dude that's fucking disgusting"you hear her say in a disgusted tone as you go to sit down on the opposite side of the couch.
>Leaning forward you grab the remote off the small coffee table
>And with remote in hand you press the power button.
>As the TV came on you could visibly see that it scared the hell auto dinky.
>"What the tortuous was that" you hear her yell at you
"What's a tortuous"you ask like a dumbass
>"That doesn't matter" you hear her say in a softer tone
>"What.Is.That" you hear her say again pointing at the currently turned on TV
"That.Is.The.TV"you say replicating the way she was talking.
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>>27496455
Call me out if i'm wrong but I think I did good on this one.
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>>27496498
You're wrong.
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>>27496498
>>27496629
>tortuous
I think you meant "Tartarus"
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>>27493909
A little critique but it's kinda getting my autism going. You seem to use >You a lot to start your sentences, it's really distracting and also kind of cheap to always use that, imo you'll find that using other ways of starting the sentences will make the sentences flow better.
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>>27489302

>fast forward three days spent by settling in, you're sitting under a big apple tree, munching on an apple
>you're now living together in Sarah's house in Ponyville, which may be a bit smaller than your old home, but a lot more picturesque
>ponies around still didn't get completely used to your presence, but it's not that much of a deal as it was with Zecora
>they don't fear you, as they have been announced of your presence, but when you walk around the village, everypony is looking at you
>either curiously, sometimes a bit cautiously but you always catch their attention
>gives you a mixed feelings, but it doesn't feel like you're unwelcome here
>you even got few job offers and since your body feels a lot stronger in this world, you can be a great help
>for a start, you chose to help out on Sweet Apple Acres at least for some time, out of nostalgia to the show and to see how the bucking of apples actualy works
>not even mentioning the free apples, which are a lot tastier than average ones on Earth
>but you kinda plan to move on to something else, though still not sure what and when exactly
>you have plenty of time
>right now, you're after your work day and just resting and waiting for Sarah
>she told you to meet you there under this tree, after you're done with the work, so you two could have a little stroll and to show you the areas outside of the Ponyville
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>and there she flies
>she lands a bit clumsily a few meters from your feet and crashes straight into your arms
>you laugh as you catch her and give her a kiss on her nose
„Hey, Petal.“
>she giggles happily and folds her wings
>„Hi Nonny. How was your first work day?“
„Cool. Wasn't actualy that hard. And a lot more entertaining than my usual work routine on Earth. How about yours?“
>Sarah blows her mane out of her face before speaking
>“Aww, It's good to finally do something productive after all those days I spent doing pretty much nothing. But, actualy it's more than just good. Guess what?“
„Don't know.“
>“Come on, at least try! Guess.“ she puts her hoofs on you shoulders in anticipation
„Alright then… Did you… I don't know… Did you finally get your cutie mark?“
>you say the first thing that comes to your mind
>“EXACTLY! How did you know? Check!“
>she turns around, opens her wings and faces them down to make them not interfere in the view of her flank
>“Ta dah!“
>it's a green sprout in a circle
>pic related
„That is amazing Sara- I mean, I guess I should call you Grass Walker now, eh?“
>“Well, it's my official name here, but you can still call me the same if you want.“
„Alrighty then. And how does it feel to finally have a cutie mark?“
>“To be honest, if I earned it before my little trip on Earth, I guess it would make me a lot happier, but now it just somehow feels like some sort of formality. You know, I already found myself thanks to you and that matters a lot more than a picture on my flank.“
„So… no celebration?“
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>>27497276

>“But of course we're celebrating! Just when we get home.“ she laughs „Now I remembered, speaking of Earth, I can finally invite you for that pizza.“
„Wasn't it me, who was supposed to invite you?“
>“Nah, you won the race.“
„Well, if you say so...“
>“Sure I do. Yeah and another thing. Those seeds you brought are already germinating. so I planted them in front of the house. Is that alright?“
„Of course. We don't have to hide those things like on Earth… But I wonder, do you think it has something to do with your cutie mark? You know, since it's a sprout.“
>“Not sure, but I think not. I work with a lot of other plants in my new job too.“
„I see. Well,.. and are we staying here or…?“
>“Yeah, the stroll, I almost forgot, let's go.“
„And where are we going?“ you stand up slowly
>“Just a little walk around the area. And to show you some favourite places of mine. Come, come.“
>she's jumping happily next to you as you walk, sometimes lifting herself into the air and flapping her wings for some time before returning to the surface
>it's great to see her like this
>now that she finally can be free
>in a place where both of you belong
>and not locked in your house all the time
>for the first time, it looks like every single aspect of your life is finally in place
>happiness can have many different forms, but it never felt so real before

>THE END MY DUDES
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>>27484780
>corner of your eye.
Ponies see to the sides of their faces and don't really need to look in their peripheral vision to see someone standing directly to the side of them.

>>27493909
Its kind of cute how the mom says she just bought her not to have her be a slave to someone else, but I wonder if she would actually make any effort to let her get back to equestria or not. A slave in anything but name if she can't leave.

Silver spoon is an dirt horse too, so shes rather strong. Jenny is very lucky she is not seriously injured. if Spoons was on her side, she must have just been unable to truly strike her in a bad way and spoons didn't realize it was only a kick at the furthest part of her hooves.

I wonder if mom will punish her though, Horse kicks are nothing to ever not take seriously even if accidentally. If mommy knows much about ponies from earth or how strong these ponies can be, she might have to condition spoon to never react violently when scared whether it was an accident or not. Maybe teach her daughter a bit of proper horse safety, such as never approaching silver spoon by behind and staying in her very vast field of view before doing things like petting her.

Can't wait to see what happens next.
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>>27497288
and here i was anticipating you pulling something, and have it turn out they were monitoring him to see if he would corrupt equestria or something.

thanks for the cute green pony pics and story too

Stay comfy friendo
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>>27495483
Yay !
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>>27497086

0 Synonyms found for you

http://www.thesaurus.com/
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>>27497288
Based ending. Thanks for the green mang.
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>>27497332
>corner of your eye.

I think the author ment that silver was trying to be subtle.
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daily reminder that lazy writefag is for whipping
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>>27497961
I swear I'll get back to work soon! I just need to finish planning out all of my summer class lessons and then I'll be fine.
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>>27498555
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>>27497288
The way you deal with the cutie mark really is well done - she doesn't think it's a big deal at this point, you don't make it a big deal. It just is.
Very comfy story. Sad to see it finish, but that's a nice place to do it.
Wouldn't object to seeing random shorts of Anon/Sarah's time in Equestria if you ever feel like dropping some small bits here and there.

Any objection to me making a custom of Grass Walker as my next project pony?
I'm thinking of using a Rainbow Dash blindbag base, sculpt on some extra hair, and paint her up in green and yellow.

>>27495561
>>You bet a pony wouldn't act this annoying, even if it could talk
I was wrong about everything I told you last night. Somehow, Claire needs to buy Rainbow Dash. Still think that other pony would have some interesting things, but Dash could be funnier. Particularly if she didn't want to be a slave and kept getting in fights with Gilda about it. If she's the crustiest cunt around, eventually Claire and Gilda might bond over shared annoyance.
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>>27497288
Perfect, now I can read the entire thing at once.
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>>27497288
Update your pastebin mang.
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story finished
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>>27497961
I need a whipping
maybe it helps
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Still waiting for Occultfag summoning Demonpone that tries to escape from hell
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>>27493909

>Janny eventually stood up and stepped away, telling Jenny to give you your space.
>Not sure what to think, you decide to stay behind the couch.
>Your breathing started to calm down, with the rest of your body.
>Its becoming easier to think.
>Thinking back to when you hit the floor, you could see Jenny looking down at you.
>She looked scared.

>Scared for you.

>Breathing and shaking under control, you take a long slow breath to steady yourself.
>Using trembling hooves to wipe the tears away and adjust your glasses.
>You slowly start edging towards the light beyond the couch.
>Keeping an ear out for... something. Anything.
>What exactly? You don't know.

>The carpet under your hooves makes your movement silent.
>You peak your nose out from behind the couch to look around the room.
>Jenny is sitting on one of the large comfy looking chairs.
>The magic mirror is still playing those pictures.
>A cat with a large club chasing a mouse.
>But Jenny is ignoring it to play with two stuffed dolls.

>Something smells good.
>Salty.
>Savory.
>Mouth watering.
>The sounds of cooking are coming from the kitchen.
>Deciding to investigate the smells you creep out of your hiding spot.

>"Are you better now?"

>Like a dear in a head light, you freeze.
>One hoof mid air, head low, crouching like a cat.
>Jenny is looking at you.
>Maybe she wants an answer.

"I... think so."

>You kicked her.

"I kicked you... Are you okay?"

>Throat tight, muscles tense.

>"Yeah, I'm okay. It's kinda my fault for scaring you." She absentmindedly rubs her belly.

"Wha- No, no, its my fault. I shouldn't have reacted the way I did."

>Jenny looks at you.
>She looks at the dolls.
>She holds one of the dolls out to you.
>"You wanna play with me?"
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>>27500750
Oh man I'm liking this
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>>27501232
I wouldn't mind a birdbutt pet.
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>>27497650
uh huh... you clearly missed my point.
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>>27501472

Ignoring that anon, I did try to adjust to your criticism.
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Drew this Cadance bondage thing. All I'm going to finish tonight, still have some fluff and the legs and the wings to do, maybe another time. Could someone come up with the story behind the pic? It would be nice.
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>>27501551
Anon owns Shining and Cadance, all three are into RP and other weird shit.
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>>27499255
>don't want to be a slave
>man what a cunt
wow stop posting any time.
being a bad slave isn't the same as having a shitty personality.
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>>27501551
I'm with>>27502363
Don't make it harder than it has to be.
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>>27500750
>no mom to check on the situation and deliver a stern nose booping for kicking.
Mom of the year award.
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>>27502363
All three have a good relationship, Cadance and Shining were into weird stuff By Equestrian stndards Before, but being owned by Anon and having the internet have opened them up to all kinds of new things.
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>>27502363
>RP
For some reason all I can think of is Shining and Cadance pulling a roman chariot with Anon in mildly erotic gladiatorial getup.
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>>27500750
>a green being that nice to little SP

You're not setting us up for and abusive father or something to show up, are you?
Cuz that would hurt.
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>>27502701
man
how generic would that be
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I wish to be Anoncolt
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>>27502741
I'm perfectly fine with being a superior biped, thanks.
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>>27502751
Then can I be a pony's pet human?
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>>27503172
No faggot. Your very presence disgusts me.
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>>27503216
I've lived a hard goddamn life
I deserve to have a collar slapped on my neck and be cared for by a cute mare
You and your kin are a plague
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>>27503216
But I want to be a snuggleslave, Anon.
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>>27503260
Personally I've always wanted to make her my terribly unwilling snuggleslave, but each to his own I guess.
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>>27503260
>"Fine, sunbutt, I'll fuck you, but I get to ride you around in public all day afterward."
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>>27500750

"Ruh...I... um, er..."

>Good job words.

"Uh... s-sure."

>Trying to relax your jittery electrified nerves, you trot over to her,
>Carefully taking the doll in your teeth, and stepping a few paces back, you sit on your rump and drop the doll into your lap.
>Jenny eyes you wearily, unconsciously licking her tongue against her teeth.

>That concerns you.

"What?"

>"You put it in your mouth...?"

>Oh.

"Well, I don't exactly have claws like you."

>You wiggle a hoof in the air to make the point.
>She holds up her hand and wiggles her fingers.
>By Celestia, that's creepy.
>As she's stepping down from the chair, Janny steps into view from the kitchen.

>Time freezes.

>Don't panic.
>Maybe holding perfectly still will work again.
>You hug the doll to your chest, hopefully it will provide enough padding if need be.

>She takes a slow step into the room and then lowers herself to one knee.
>Closing your eyes you take a slow breath.
>When you open them again, you see Janny is sitting with her legs crossed again.

>"How are you feeling?"

"S-scared."

>"You don't need to be scared of me..."

>For a split second, you could have sworn you were looking at a yellow pegasus with a pink mane.
>Blinking the ghosts away, you nod and try to talk passed the knots in your chest and throat.
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>>27503519

"Am... Am I going to be in trouble?"

>"No, but you might not get a cookie after dinner-" You hear Jenny gasp in horror at the thought. "We do have to have a sit down, and talk about what happened."

>You cringe.
>Nodding you look up at her, much more relaxed, but still weary.

>"So, when you woke up, you kicked Jenny, - I'm not mad, just..."
>She motions Jenny over too her.
>When the little girl sits in her mom's lap, she lifts the shirt up, showing a slightly pink pair of circles on the girl's belly.

>"We got lucky that you only grazed her, I know how strong hooves can hit,"
>You gulp, nodding.
>"but I also know you didn't do it on purpose."
>You look into Jenny's and Janny's eyes, and see the forgiveness.

"I'm sorry for hitting you."

>Jenny rubs her belly. "S'okay."
The smile she gives you could light up the darkest of dungeons.

>"But Jenny, will also have to be careful to not startle you again. Right Jenny?"
>She nods, looking upside down at her mom.
>"Now, I'm going to go back to the kitchen, dinner is almost ready."
>After getting out from under her daughter, Janny looks at you with a smirk.
>"I hope you like broccoli and alfredo pasta."

>Suddenly reminded, the smell hits you like a train.
>Rich savory smells assault your seances.
>You hear your belly growl.
>Followed by Jenny giggling.
>You blush.
>"Yeah, I'm hungry too. But I hope she wasn't serious about you not getting a cookie, no one deserves that."
>She picks up her doll and resumes playing with it.
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>>27503519
>>27503529
Still adorable. 10/10 would daugheru
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>You're Anon and Cheerilee's hug is nice
>How the hell is this pony so goddamn soft?
>It's black magic, some sort of voodoo or something
>Either way, you're a bit sad to see her go
>Sure you'd only had her there for a day or so but she seemed nice enough to be around
>Is she sniffing your hair?
>...
>Yes, yes she is
>And now she's shuddering a bit
"Okay, this hug is over."
>You stand up
>Cheerilee stumbles a bit at your sudden movement
>Her stumbling knocks you over and you land flat on your ass
>"Sorry."
"Don't make this weirder than it needs to be."
>Moondancer is behind her, still quaking with anger at the events from a few moments ago
>Your options are limited here, Moondancer is blocking the path to your car
>Before you can make your decision, she speaks
>"Let's just go inside and get this done."
"So I'm off the hook?"
>She doesn't answer as she finishes walking to the door and opens it
>You and Cheerilee follow her
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>>27503752
>As soon as you enter, you're confronted with the sight and stench of Neckbeards
>Several of them turn to the three of you as you enter
>You're already regretting this
>So many fedoras
>So many cringe-inducing pins placed inside those fedoras
>So much grease
>One of them is literally staring at Moondancer's ass as she walks by him
>You cringe as another tips his fedora to Cheerilee
>She is visibly uncomfortable in here
>You can only imagine what it was like to live with one of these things
>One of them walks up and starts to try and talk to you about your ponies
>You ignore him and keep walking
>He fucking follows you and starts trying to talk to Moondancer
>The bulbous lard sack speaks
>"Hey."
>Moondancer, instead of simply not engaging with him, tries to politely tell him to fuck off
>"Hello, look we're really trying to get this thing done."
>Oh for fuck's sake he has a visible erection already! She's only said one sentence!
>"Maybe I can help. A beautiful pony like yourself shouldn't be here alone."
>"I'm not alone, I'm here with my owner. So everything's fine."
>"You seem stressed out, do you need a hug?"
>"Look, I've had a long day and-
>Despite her very clear protest, the mound bends down and begins to envelope her in his flabby arms
>Maybe today won't be so bad after all
>She fucking gets it
>His hands start at her back but slowly move downward and Moondancer is clearly uncomfortable
>Is this faggot seriously trying to cop a feel on your horse?
>Just as you finish that thought, his hand hits her butt-tattoo and she yelps
>Then she bites down on his shoulder
>He howls out in pain and drops her
>"What the hell? You can't just bite me!"
>"You can't just hug me without my consent! And you ESPECIALLY can't just grab my ass either you creep!"
>"It was just a hug!"
>A couple of his buddies are there now
>You decide to join them before shit gets too bad
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>>27503758
"What happened here?"
>"This stupid pony just bit me out of nowhere!"
>You decide to play along with him to see where this goes
>You adopt a parental tone
"Moondancer, did you bite this person for no reason?"
>"He molested me!"
>"She's a fucking lying about me now!"
"Well I did watch you cop a feel on my horse there. You're not very subtle."
>His face is beet red
>"That's not what happened, you idiot!"
>You laugh in his face
"Is that really your best attempt at damage control?"
>He mad now
>"Are you calling me a liar?"
"Among other things."
>He gets in your face
>His breath threatens to bring back the ice cream sandwich from earlier
>"I'll kick your ass, I learned karate and have trained with Katanas for three years now!"
>He pushes you and you trip over Moondancer, who had apparently moved to behind you without you noticing
>She cringes in pain
>You realize that she still had a fairly sizable bruise from the day before and you may have just hit her there
>You look up to see a smug neckbeard laughing with his friends
>You rise and Mr. Meatsweat takes an anime fighting stance
>Do you and Moondancer have to fight some kind of ridiculous super-fag every time you go out or something?
>You throw one punch and hit him square in the jaw and he stumbles back and leans on one of the long tables
>Problem solved
>Just as you are about to turn around to check on Moondancer, a strong hand clasps your shoulder and violently jerks you around
>The next thing you know, you're on the ground, your vision is going black
>Grandpa always said that Victor had a mean right hook
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>>27496455
>"What's a TV" you hear her say with a qurious tone
"A TV is a electrical box that projects images"You say trying to sound smart
>"Okay whatever you say"you hear her say as she gets back in her position on the couch.
>Content with your explanation you decide to watch your local news station to see what is going on in the world
"-ut it seems that the protesters aren't leaving anytime soon"
>Boring
>Seeing as the news wasn't reporting on anything interesting you decide to watch some Netflix on your console instead.
https://youtu.be/F7TKcFQBR5g?t=645
>Eleven minuets later
>You are really enjoying the "the walking dead" and you are watching it very intently wondering what's going to happen next
*Knock* *Knock*
>But that all ended when you got a knock on your door
>Pausing your movie with a sigh of annoyance
>You then began to get up and walk towards the door grumbling all the while
>But before you open the door you haft to make sure to check the peephole and make sure that there aren't any of those Jehovah's Witnesses faggots.
>Luckily it was just Daniel.
>He was most likely here to update you on the truck job even if it was a few days early.
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>>27503529
>brocoli and alfredo.
those don't even go together and they sound both amazing. Based mom.
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>>27503882
Clearly, you've never truly lived.
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>>27503311
>"You drive a hard bargain, Anonymous, but I accept."
>You are Anon, royal slave, and your scheme for freedom is underway.
>The princess has accepted your offer, and you get to ride her tomorrow.
>When that happens you'll ride her so hard she'll get worn out and lose control of the sun amidst her exhaustion, plunging Equestria into chaos as the movement of the sun fucks up!
>JUST AS PLANNED!
>Nyehehehehehheheheh!
>But first, sex.

>SEX SCENE NOT FOUND
>Oh come on!

>The next day.
>You mount Celestia, ready to enact your brilliant scheme!
"Let's go, princess, hiya!"
>The princess went off at a quite relaxed pace.
"Uh... hiya?"
>Celestia lets out a light chuckle.
>"Oh, Anon, I said you could ride me, not that you could command me. You need to be more specific next time."
>Dammit!
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>>27502701
It's worse than that, it's A middle class white family with traditional values, including the husband holding his wife's hand.
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>>27503529
Maybe the mom knows a thing or two from riding, and not that weekend shit either, those people are the worst.
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>>27505038
>White
>Family
>TraditionAL VALUES?
>HUSBAND??
>HAND HOLDING???
i literally cant even anymore you sHiTlOrD?
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>>27505097
Yes Anon, Values.
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>>27495483
>”Flutterbutter –“
>”Flutter*shy*.”
>”- whatever, pick out another anime. I’m gonna throw these pants in the laundry and grab some more beers from the –“
>”I’ve already picked one.”
>Anon stops mid-stride, one foot up in the air defying gravity.
>Reminds you of some of the ponies you used to know.
>You take a drink.
>”Um, that was fast. What?”
>”Cat Planet Cuties. It sounds adorable.”
>She’s right. It does.
>Almost like something from back home.
>You take another drink.
>”Seriously?”
>”Mhm.”
>”GONNA GO GET CLEAN PANTS ON. BERRY, GET SOME BEER.”
“Think I’m going to need something harder than that."
>”THEN MIX US SOMETHING. GETTING NEW PANTS.”
>He runs off before you can point out that you DON’T HAVE HANDS.
>Well. Shit.
>You stare at the collection of tasty, tasty hooch and sigh.
“Close your eyes, Buttershy –“
>”Fluttershy.”
“ – whatever. This is going to get ugly.”

All for now. I'll write more at work tomorrow.
CYOA time. What happens from here?
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>>27503864
>You open the door slowly
>"Anon quit fucking around and let me in"you hear Danial say in a very grumpy tone
"Of course" you reply in a joking manner as you open the door and allow him entry
>You both walk into the living room
>You sit where you were sitting before
>While Daniel chose the arm chair next to the TV
"So what are you doing around these parts"You ask hoping to Stir up a conversation
>"Someone broke down a street or two down the block"He said gesturing to the general direction where it was
"What happened to him"you ask curiously while leaning back on your couch arm
>"Turns out the dumbass had some loose cables so it was a easy fix"he states matter-factly
"If it was so easy then why did you come here instead of going strait back to your shop"You ask pressing him for answers
>"Because I wanted to tell you that your order was finished"
"But I thought you said that it'll take a couple of days"you say surprised
>"That was a willed guess not an actual time"he said in a strained voice as he shifts in his chair
"Thanks Danel this is some good news" you reply in a happy tone
>"Well I better go now I just wanted to let you know that the truck was done"he said as he walks to the front door
>But before he went out the front door you saw him turn to you and say in a sad tired voice"Oh and anon....Keep your nose clean"
>And like that he shut the door and left.
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>>27505396
>I misspelled Daniel.....
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>>27505144
>Need to open her eyes to otaku culture online. she even know anime is from jap land?
>What kind of drunk is fs when shes really blitzed?.
>Maybe some jealousy from berry?
>Watch some anime that scares the butter out of buttershy.
>Maybe a little more character development for berry? history? does she drink to keep from being lonely? Even retail workers can feel feels, at least when not on the clock.
>fs get into shota or loli and ends up creeping on kids at work... OK. That may be over the line.

>>27505419
Don't let those fags rile you up mang. I'm enjoying it so far.
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>>27503899
nah, I try weird combinations all the time.
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>>27499016
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>>27503773
GOD DAMN IT WHERE IS THE REST?!
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>>27505097
Don't worry tumblerina, there are real people in the world. You aren't by the way, your just a crazy animal. Keep trying though.
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>Dick gets pony just to abuse
>Proceeds to beat her with a golf club
>pony doesn't even notice that he's trying to hurt her.
>"i don't think this is how you play gulf"
>After he collapses from exhaustion she (completely uninjured) asks if he is ok, and if there is anything she can do to help.
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>>27506673
Inept Slave owner sounds like a fun time.
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>>27497288
I wanna thank you all people who took the time to read it and for all the support in form of feedback because knowing someone is actualy there is pretty motivating.

Also, If anyone is interested, I have a few pages of another story. It's about Dash this time and thematicaly closer to the thread topic.Should I post it?

>>27499881
Updated + linked images

>>27499255
>Any objection to me making a custom of Grass Walker as my next project pony?
No problem at all.
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>>27505419
Damn, Daniel!
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>>27505690
Some of those are doable. All of them, really, but we'll see how much can get worked in.

>>27505144
>She glances your direction, then at the bottles, then at you, then firmly at the DVD case.
>"Um... maybe I should put the DVD in?"
"How? You don't have hands."
>"Um..."
>Okay, you don't mix any drinks.
>Instead, you sit back and watch. Would be better if you had popcorn.
>Fuck yeah, there's some on the table!
>You grab the bowl and slump back in the seat to watch the fun unfold.
>Fluttershy fumbles with the case with both forehooves.
>You eat popcorn.
>Finally she gets is open.
>You eat more popcorn.
>"Um..."
"Yeah. Good luck."
>"Thanks..."
>She jabs at the tab with her hoof, over and over.
"Uh-huh, not so easy is it?"
>"I can do this."
"Uh-huh."
>She tries to poke at it with just the tip of her hoof.
>Still no luck. Not for her anyway. You've got plenty of luck, like Anon not coming back to ruin your fun.
>You laugh unabashedly as the other mare goes crosseyed trying to stare at the tab holding the DVD in place.
>"I can do this."
"Sure you can. I believe in you."
>She puts her hoof down and stares even more ferociously at the tab.
>"I can do this."
>And then she sticks her tongue out.
"What the hell are you -"
>"Goth it!" Fluttershy cheers merrily, DVD impaled on her tongue. "Thankth for beliefin in me!"
>She trots over to the DVD player humming a cheerful tune.
>Just like somepony would do back home.
"Shit."
>You take another drink.
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>>27506736
Yeah men post it your work is awesome
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>>27507774
>Maybe hanging out with other ponies isn't such a great idea, particularly her.
>"Uhhhhhhhh..."
"What?"
>"Can hew ohen the hayer?"
"What."
>"The hayer," Fluttershy repeats, poking at the - oh, fuck, right, that's what she meant.
"Yeah, yeah."
>You slide out your chair and trot over to the sofa where Anon left the remote. Takes a few tries, but eventually you hit the right button.
>"Hanks!"
>Dammit, show's over.
>Time to make some drinks.
>You need some drinks.

>You walk back in with clean pants and a shitton of questions about your life choices.
>And the choices of others.
>"Siddown, 'non," Berry slurs, waving you over to the sofa.
>"Yeah, siddown," Fluttershy softly agrees, patting the empty space between her and the other mare. "Let's watch the show."
"Is there supposed to be pony drool on my DVD player?"
>"Mhm, siddown. Let's watch."
"Uh... okay..."
>You make your way for the empty chair, but Fluttershy pats the empty space on the sofa again.
>"Here. Best view here."
"Then why don't you sit there? I've seen this before and -"
>"If I sit next to her, Berry will bite me again."
>What?
>WHAT!
"Wat."
>"I didn't bite her."
>"She growled."
"Berry..."
>"I didn't!"
>"She wanted to."
>"I wanted to."
"Berry."
>"Siddown."
>"Yeah, siddown."
>Fuck it.
>You siddo - uh, *sit down* between the two mares.
"Fine, but are you sure you want to watch this show? It's kind of... um..."
>Okay, how do you explain this to ponies?
>"Yeah," Fluttershy murmurs. "I wanna watch it."
>She's already in the zone, staring at menu screen with a single-minded focus, barely enough attention left over to hold the tumbler in her hooves.
"It's... um... I don't know if you'd like it. It's..."
>"Its a harem anime. I know. Play."
"What."
>"Play."
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>>27508175
Did...did Fluttershy just come out an say she was cool sharing?
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>>27506673
Someone needs to write this!
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>>27506673
Earth pony magic. Makes them borderline indestructible.
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>>27508607
>>27509106
A mare you can whip to your heart's content without worrying about endangering her life. How nice.
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>>27503529

>You've finally started to truly relax again.
>Playing with the doll seems to have helped the most.

>You hear a loud roaring slowly getting louder.
>It's far to regular sounding to be a dragon.
>The roars settle to a loud purring, like a large cat.
>Looking out the front window, you see a second carriage has pulled up.
>The purring stops as someone steps out of the carriage.

>It's a human stallion- or, man, as they say.
>He walks passed the window up to the front door.
>The door opens without knocking.

>The fur on you back starts to stand on end.
>Eyes are glued on the door.
>Body frozen in anxious anticipation.

>A deep baritone voice to end all deep baritone voices.

>"Honey I'm- oof!"

>"Daddy!" Jenny hugs the man around the legs at a dead sprint.

>Her forehead hits him square in the groin in her attack hug.
>He goes down like a sack of potatoes.
>You wince as the house shakes with his weight hitting the floor.

>"Hnnng... hey pumpkin... s'good to see you too..."

>He slowly assumes the fetal position, hands cupping his groin tenderly.
>Without a second to let him breath, Jenny moves up to hug the man across the chest, her arms barely wrapping around his shoulders.
>Janny steps in from the delicious smelling kitchen to see what the commotion is.

>"Jimmy?! Are you okay?"

>She quickly kneels beside him.

>"I'm okay, honey... Jenny just got my plumbs."

>Janny breaks down into hysterical laughing as she pulls Jenny off of the fallen man.

>"SNRK! Co-come on, Jenny, let your dad get settled before hugging him to death!"

>"Awe... okay."

>Its like a train wreck.
>All you can do is stare, but no matter how you try, you can't stop watching.

>As the man finally gets back to his (shaky) feet, he finally notices you.

>"Oh, hello, there."

>Janny to the rescue.
>She kneels next to you, letting Jenny go.

>"James, this is Silver Spoon."

"Uh, hi."

>Feeble hoof wave, activate.

>"Hello Silver Spoon, you can call me Jimmy."

>You nod.
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>>27501551
Same anon from yesterday. Just an update. How is it coming along so far? I'll work on the hair and the metallic stuff tommorow when I wake up. Anything you think should be added/changed? Thoughts on it so far?
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>>27503773
Oi! We need more of this!
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>>27510138
All I want to do is rub her fuzzy chest.
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>>27510086

>You desperately try to ignore the need to raise your tail.
>You mother always told you it was rude to do so.

>"So..." He looks at Jenny as he limps over to the comfy chair, wincing as he sits down. "when did we get a pony?"

>"Today. Saw the poor thing at the pet store today, she's had a bad first impression on humans, but you've seen some of the news reports of how some owners have been treating their ponies, and I couldn't stand the thought of her falling into the hands of another pervert."

>"Yeah..." He looks down at you. "Look, I'm gonna be honest with you, Spoons,-I can call you 'Spoons', right?- you're lucky my wife found you when she did. people have been doing horrid things to your kind, and them bastards are only found out after the pony is broken beyond any therapy, or worse."

>The thought hurts.
>Stuck in a box being prodded by kids doesn't; sound so bad all of a sudden.

>"Sorry to tell you, but until things cool down and people start treating ponies like they should be, or that damn war is over, you're stuck with us.

>"But the second things calm down, and it's safe for you, we'll see to it about getting you home, okay?"

>The sincerity in his eyes and words is hard to miss.
>The tears are hot and heavy.
>Closing your eyes to try to stop the tears, you're slightly startled to feel a pair a warm hands wrap around your waist and lift you into the air.
>Your hooves fail involuntarily, but stop when you look into Jimmy's eyes as he sets you in his lap.

>"Careful James, she's skittish, try not to surprise her like that. We don't want her accidentally knocking some sense into you."

>You giggle at that line.
>Holly Celestia hands are amazing.
>You can't help but to lounge across his lap as his hands scratch your ears and back.
>When did you become a house cat?
>Oh, who cares, this is the best feeling ever.

>Boy, your eye lids sure are heavy today...
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>>27506673
>Tries to abuse her sexually.
>Tries to force his way in with a screw driver
>*giggle "that tickles master"
>Playfully bats his hand away.
>This shatters his wrist fractures his arm and dislocates his shoulder.
She is away smiling and playing in the yard, as anon scowls at her from his dark little room.
She pretty much does whatever she wants. But still tried to be nice to master and fallow orders
Anon being an alpha man is terrified of anyone finding out that his cute little pony can kick his ass.
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>>27508175
"Yeah, but there's nudity and -"
>Berry lightly bats the side of your head.
>"Anon."
"What."
>"Anon."
"What."
>"Anon."
"Don't just fucking kick me in head and say my name! What!?"
>"Anon, look at me."
"Why?"
>"Just look at me."
>Fuck. Fine. You look.
>Or glare.
>Yeah. Glare.
>That sounds more accurate.
>You *glare* at the mare.
>She shrugs.
>You try to pour every speck of hatred and anger into your furious expression, and. She. Fucking. Shrugs.
"What."
>"Am I wearing anything?"
"Oh. Kay. Point."
>POKE.
>"Play."
"But I don't want to make our guest uncomfortable and SOME PONY said something about not wanting me to take off -"
>POKE.
>"Play."
>You give up on life and hit play.
>God, this is going to be embarrassing.
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>>27506673
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>>27510293
poor little spoons.
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>>27506673

>Whipcrack
>"Huh?"
"Just fucking suffer already!"
>More whipping.
>"Oh, uh..."
>Even more, harder whipping.
>"Ow."
>"Oof."
>"The pain."
>"Aaaaagh."
>"Please master no more."
"GODDAMMIT!"
>Toss whip away.
>"Sorry, master."
>Storm out of the room.
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>>27510405
>POKE
FFS FS is annoying the hell out of me and I'm just read what she's doing. Perhaps her cuteness there is enough to soften the blow
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>>27510638
>"Master likes petting me with his petting whip."
>"And master likes to smoke so I fallow him around so he has someplace to store his use cigarettes."
>She says as she steps out side to shake the ashes off her back and into the flowerbed.
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>>27510138
Looking good.

>>27510293
Neat, it's almost like a trip to the 50s-60s, all this guy needs is a wooden pipe and news media.
Maybe a Scotch to go with.
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>>27510926
Maybe news media about wooden pipes and scotch?
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>>27510293
>I can call you 'Spoons', right?
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>>27510138
Nitpicking mode engaged, that's what you asked for.
> The perspective on her horn is weird, it should be more toward us.
> The wing restraints are hiding too much : it look like you forgot the wings and there is just something behind her. Maybe keep the belts, but remove the leather to show the wing's texture.
> The hair color are significantly off compared to the show
> Cadence's curls are much bigger/longer, here it look more like Bonbon's or Sweetie Belle's mane.

I love of you managed to make her look a bit fluffy, however.
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>>27510783
Pretty sure it's Berry doing all the poking.
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>>27510086
Seriously fuck your character names.
>Janny
>Jimmy
>Jenny
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>>27511676
>thinking anyone besides Silver Spoon actually matters
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>>27511684
Can't wait till the rape scene
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>>27511711
>raped by the three Js
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>>27510316
>Anon is scared by the small horse.
>He barricades himself in his room.
>She casually opens the door and knocks over the barricade.
>Oh god, oh fuck!
>Thinking quickly, he throws a plate at her head, hoping against hope it does any damage.
>She catches it in her mouth, seemingly not even aware of Anon's intent to harm.
>She deposits the ersatz Frisbee in front of Anon, who is frightened.
>"Master, are you alright, you look scared."
>Anon makes a decision.
>This will not be a last stand.
>He pulls back his arm, ready to punch this ungodly creature right in it's face.
>He strikes the mare's face with all the might his body can muster!
>Won_Paaaanch.cda not found.
>And he fails to do any damage to anything except his hand.
>Unless you count a bit of temporarily scrunching snooter damage.
>She certainly doesn't.
>In fact, she seems entertained by your antics.
>"Master, you're so silly!"
>Anon backs away and falls onto his bed.
>His bed is right in the corner of his room, so he's literally cornered.
>Then his pony slave hops onto the bed and worms her way right next to him.
>He is paralyzed by fear, keeping him lying down next to the warm, soft menace he brought into his home.
>"Good night, master."
>Anon's slave yawns as she presses close up to Anon.
>Anon then wept like a lil bitch.
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>>27505396

>You then decid to pick up your new truck from Daniel's garage
>You then walk back into your room and put on your boots because you weren't going to walk a mile in just your bare feet.
>But before you go you also need a quick piss
>So you head to your bathroom and as you to grab the door handle
>You soon realize that it was locked
>But just as you begin to think that you locked yourself out of your own bathroom you hear the shower coming on and your curtains being rustled.
>"Hey it's me I was hoping that you din't mind me borrowing you shower for a bit"you hear dinky say in a happy tone
"Sure knock yourself out"You say not really minding
"after all I could always piss on my neighbors front porch"You think as you begin walking to your front door
>And as you walk through the door you are presented with a very comfusing surprise
>There sitting in-front of your home was a truck
"Who the hell put this here" you think confused.
>Looking closer at the truck you see a sealed envelope taped on the truck's windshield
>Walking towards the vehicle you start to wander if that Mexican guy you stole the trck from had any criminal connections.
>You carefully begin to open the envelope worried that this me a mail bomb
>You are relieved to find a pair of keys attached to a knife key-chain.
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>>27512566
>trck
>Truck
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>>27512566
>>27512590
Text to speech, friendo. It'll keep you from ever letting those go through again.
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>>27512720
Thanks for the advice anon.
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>>27506281
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>>27497288
Thank you for the long hours typing until you burned eyelashes, Thank you for resist the temptation to leave halfway seeking greener pastures, thanks for joining us in our darkest hour against whom not to be named and his evil mopping, thanks for the laughs , penalties and emotions, thanks Klaiffernon for this cute olivean pegasus and until next time
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>>27503529
>>27503519

This is a solid 100/100 Spoons my friend
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>>27503758
Read this part and imagine this guy
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Looking for honest critic so far.
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>>27514328
Does Silver Spoon still have her glasses?

This will affect your final grade
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>>27514362
Yes, if you read carefully, though rarely mentioned.
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>>27514328
Everything seems to be going too nice for Silver, but I don't really mind that. It's adorable.
Would like to know some more info about the war and the world, but it's understandable that Silver would have a limited perspective on it.
Human character names are overly similar, as has been pointed out.
Overall, really enjoying it. Fills a similar comfy feel story to the Sarah story. Pretty white knighty, but I hope it stays that way. Hurting Silver at this point would feel edgy and meaningless unless you took some time to build up to it.
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>>27514372
gr0ss/10
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>>27514386
I kinda like the way this family feels like they stepped out of the 50s, it's a neat and cute story so far, which is nice.
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>>27514386
The names are intentional and humorous to me.

The limited perspective on the world is also intentional, and I do want to do some minor world building. But have it so you're only allowed to know as much as she does.

Maybe just enough knowledge past her view to make you yell at the story to not go in the proverbial closet.

I do want to lead up to some actual darkness and drama, but nothing "emo look I'm edgy too", but at the same time, avoid being predictable or cliche.

And the 'too nice' feeling is partly my bad writing abilities at work, but I want to show that this family does want to help. But the question is, can they help in this situation.
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>>27514328
Other than the names that left me struggling to remember who was who.
It is very sweet (which i love) but almost too good to be true and leaves me fearing that it's going to be taken away.

I wish i was smart enough to give you the review you desire. but i can't say much other than that and that i love it.
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>>27514469
Janice, mom.
James, dad.
Jenifer, daughter.
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>>27514475
Yaaaa. I practically have a learning disability when I comes to certain things.
So I'll forget again the next post. I'll get over it.
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>>27514475
>James, dad.
Rayonr, dad.
FTFY
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>>27512566
>Taking the keys out of the envelope you press the unlock button
*Honk* *Honk*
>"It seems that the keys belonged to the mysterious truck"you think sarcastically knowing full well where the keys went
>you open the driver side door and upon looking inside you see a note taped to the steering wheel
>Taking the note into your hands you begin to read the note
>"Dear anon I made sure to make it so that no one would be able to recognize the truck as you requested and I also took the liberty of adding some modifications so it would be like your old car"
>"p.s About the gun I found in the glove compartment I made double sure to Grind off the serial number and wipe it clean of prints "
>"-Daniel"
>".....Burn this note"
>"Well he was true to his word it did look different"you thought as you examine the truck if you count spraying it a lighter verson of black Pic Related
>Taking out your zippo you begin to light the note on fire and then you throw it down on the ground
"How the hell did he even bring this here"You think as you get in the driver seat
>Settling in the driver seat and shutt the door
>You begin to think what to do next
>Thinking of your options two particular ones come up
>You could ether

A.Shop lift some dinner from the local grocery store.
Or
B.Go to the gym and workout or steal shit.
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>>27514829
C. Go back to 2nd grade and learn some damn English
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>>27514863
F. See me after class
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>>27514897
y-yes sir..
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Need more subjugated stallions.
Am I right or am I right?
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>>27514974
You are quite correct. Stallion must be ridden.
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>>27514983
I've been seeing a lot of mares, but not nearly enough whipping
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>>27515002
Here you go.
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>>27515099
You can't write for shit, but you sure know how to treat a mare.
<3
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>>27515099
>>27515233
Fuck you both. Pone is not for heavy abuse.
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>>27515245
Pone must know its place
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>>27515274
Pone can learn its place from horrific boopings
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>>27515278
This is a properly tamed horse
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I really want to read more about that homeless anon story. it just felt to tragic to let die so easily.

That or hunteranon to come back. Both of his fucking stories I miss so damn much.
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>>27514328
Honestly would like more strictness, but thats a taste thing more than anything. I feel like silver spoon is far too trusting, but that could also be chocked up to tone as I mentioned earlier. Tone can excuse a lot of illogical things, but as I like more adult granular settings and situations, my instinct is going to be naturally pointed more towards utilitarian ideals of relationship. Janny may want to help the horse but she's the adult looking after her child, while the horse is a pet, A quadruped easy enough to fit in a dog carrier and be lugged around. Motivation by humanitarian ideals is certainly possible, but loyalties are measured differently, standards aren't fair but favor the humans, and other things of that nature.

It's probably not what you're going for, but I feel this drawn out explination serves a more illuminating purpose than just using ye old "more 'realistic'" when really what I was trying to articulate as pragmatism.

Honestly you've earned a boatload of points from me regardless. your protagonist is the submissive, your owners are a family mainly focusing a mom and little girl. It's hard to top that kind of situation. Especially when you compare to all the anon fics.
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>>27515245
>>27515099
>>27515274
>>27515278
>>27515387
Wrong. too much abuse just makes the pone not try to behave becuase the consiquences for failure don't differentiate between the consiquences of obedience.

A proper mare knows her place but to get that effect you must consistantly show her a side of you that it can identify with, if you can't do that, she'll never develope stockholm syndrome. Capture bonding relies on the animal thinking you are nice, it's not automatic.
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>>27510293

>An awe inspiring smell brings you back to the world of the living.
>Your nose takes in a deep rich smell.
>Slowly opening your eyes, first thing you notice, you're no longer in James' lap.

>The blanket was the first tell.
>The pillow was the second clue.
>The blurry everything was the third.

>After feeling around with your hooves, you find your glasses have been put off to your side.
>Putting them on and looking around, you recognize the couch you're laying on.
>Sitting up, you see that the coffee table has been pushed closer to the couch, and a glass of water sits not to far out of reach.

>After a quick stretch of your legs, you roll off of the couch and drink the offered water.

>"Ah, you're awake."

>After snorting up half the cup's worth of water, then sputtering and gagging it back into the cup, you notice James stepping into the living room.

>"Sorry, didn't mean to startle." He points back to the kitchen. "Well, I was just coming to wake you so you don't miss dinner."
>"You are hungry, right?"

"Uhhhh, I mean, eep, er... yes, thank you."
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>>27510138
An update on the picture. How is it so far? I'll shade the hair once I've finished dinner.
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>>27516226

>"Well, come on then."

>Following him to the kitchen, you're greeted by the sights and smells of Jan putting noodles on a plate, then drizzling alfredo sauce with large clearly visible chunks of green broccoli.
>The first plate is set before Jenny, the next two are set and empty seats before making herself a plate and sitting at the table.

>As James sits in at the table, you hop up onto a chair and look at your plate.
>A big pile of spiral noodles topped with a thick creamy white sauce with large cut chunks of broccoli, with a fork resting on the edge of the plate.
>You pick up the fork and stab a noodle lying outside the reach of the sauce and dip it saintly in the sauce.
>The spiral shape is perfect for trapping the alfredo.
>You bring it up to your muzzle and sniff it.
>You can't take it any more, and bite.
>Flavor explosion.
>Perfectly mixed spices and consistency, complemented by the chewiness of the noodle.
>You hum in delight as you stab a chunk of broccoli, the tiny leafy tips coated in sauce.
>The soft crunch, and the planty flavor of the boiled greens, again, mixing with the sauce...

>Now it all makes sense, you died in that plastic box of starvation at the pet store and went to food heaven.

>Next bite had a few noodles and a chunk of broccoli.

>You can't contain your hunger.
>As politely as you can, you start shoveling the pasta down your gullet.
>Taking the time to chew and savor the flavors.
>Closing your eyes with each bite and humming your bliss to the world.

>"Someone's a hungry girl."

>You notice the stares.

>"Sorry, if you're hungry, don't let us slow you down."

>Janny starts piling another plate high and sets it next to your current plate.
>With seconds already served, you obey your body and soul, cleanimg this plate of its impossibly delightful flavors.
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>>27516251
Looking good.
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>>27506292
>>27510157
Coming soon. Sorry, working on it. Within the next couple days.
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>>27516910
Fine, this information settled my curiosity. For now.
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>>27516251
Finished the drawing. Hope you guys/gals like it.
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>>27510405
These pones are frustratingly cute.
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>>27510293
Adorable
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>>27517243
Wow. Stunning job! I will definitely use this for the next thread post.
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>>27514829
A
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>>27512267
This is gold anon, more updates in the future?
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>>27514328

You work is great

At the moment you have shown us Silver Spoon living with what appears to be a good and friendly family, I just hope there are no surprises in the future, also mentioned a war, there will have to be careful with veterans, the war supporters and the pony haters humans for having lost a family member or simply because they see them as the new undesirable shit in their country by stealing their jobs and taking up space and dollars.
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>>27514328
Your story has a very good setup and setting,I look forward to reading more of your stuff
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>>27517243
now you just need something between her legs
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>>27518231
You live?
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>>27518915
Of course I do.

If you didn't notice I'm the one that's posted the last few threads.
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>>27519287

I thought that he who must not be named and his bannedicators you had banished to Ponychan or worse.

It's good to read you again
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>>27510316
>After he passes out from the pain his loyal pony proceeds to drag him by his good arm 12 miles to the hospital.
>Wearing though his designer pants after the 4th mile. He leaves a red streak for the remaining distance, as his perfectly chiselled ass cheeks are ground away by the pavement.
>Anon required multiple skin graphs and blood transfusions to live.
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>>27520325
Ditto
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>>27512267
I need more of this filly
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>>27520365
Ditto, this filly is really adorable and his human is a true loser
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“What the fuck do you mean you’re not coming back?”
>”Bro it’s pretty simple, I decided to stay in Australia. Shits fucking great here, plus the women are hot as hell.”
>Pinching the bridge of your nose you contemplated throwing the phone against the wall.
“And what about Starlight, she’s your damn pony, not mine.”
>”Calm down, I’m giving her to you. Plus check your bank account there should be more than enough to cover any possible expenses you might have.”
“That’s not the fucking point.”
>”Jesus fucking Christ man you’re making this a bigger deal than it needs to be. Look I’m not coming back, and she’ll be happier there.”
“Did you tell her that? You know she’s going to have a fit about it.”
>”She’s slave bud, as attached as she is to me you have to remember she’s a slave. Yeah I pamper her, but don’t forget the fact that she’s still just a piece of property.”
>What the ever living fuck? Your brother loved that mare, why the fuck was he doing this.
>”Listen I gotta go, I’ll call you later hopefully you’ll calm down and get over your bitchiness by then.”
>With that the call disconnected.
>That fucking asshole, why were you even surprised?
>He always did this type of shit. Dropping his responsibility on anyone else.
>How Starlight was going to react was your biggest concern, she loved your brother despite her constant demeanor.
>Sitting down in your living room you contemplated on how to best to break it to her.
>A simple “Hey I’m your real master now since my brother decided to not come back” wasn’t going to cut it.
>This was going to be one giant clusterfuck you could already tell.
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>>27516253

>After dinner, you and Jenny go to the living room to watch more plays.
>This one has a grey rabbit tricking a bald man with one of those human weapons.

>Jan and James have disappeared after telling you and Jenny to stay in the living room,
>Though, during dinner, they did act like your mom and dad do in the spring...
>Stealing glances and making cutesy faces at each other.

>That night, after Jenny went to bed, Jan came out and told you that you can sleep on the couch for now.
>Her hair was all messy, and she had an airy happiness about her.
>She said that some time this week, they'll look into getting you your own bed.

>Sleep wasn't coming as quickly as you would like.
>The sound of a clock ticking, and the occasional carriage lights going by outside keep you awake.

>Tingling.
>Sighing you push the blanket aside and get up.
>When you enter the bathroom, you're confronted with a problem.
>After flicking the light on, you eye the toilet.
>Looking around, you find and stool.
>Its not wide enough for all four hooves, but it'll have to do.
>Scooting the stool into place, you hop up and do your thing.

"Ahh..."

>So much better than being stuck in that kennel.
>Though, that did teach the shop owner to keep a bucket below your kennel.

>Getting back on the couch and wrapping the blanket around you again, you finally fall asleep.

>First day living with humans, and they aren't the same as the ones who foal-napped you.

>And the nightmares have gone away too.
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>>27520701
And here I thought you were going to pull the old "end up getting it on just in time for the significant other to pull in the drive way and ketch them" cliche.

then anon starts frantically making excuses while his brother just end up laughing. because he was actually trying to set them up together because he know anon had a subconscious thing for bitchy pushy women.
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>>27521304
It made more sense in my head to try the story this way. It sucks though, throughout the day I get plenty of ideas but by the time I get home I'm either too tired to write or start dismissing those ideas as bad. Fuck grown up responsibilities.
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woah rip
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Could you anons give me some brutally honest criticism and tell me what i'm doing wrong because as you all know I wish to improve.

Please be gentle
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>>27522671
Aside from some minor grammar issues we have brought up when you made them, I personally haven't had a problem with the story.
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>>27522744
Really ....this is shocker admittedly.
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>>27522744
>>27522768
Admittedly I was expecting more problems with the story.
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>>27522781
All though now that it happened again, the fake writefags using the name are annoying but that isn't your fault.>>27522781
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>>27513448
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>>27522671
Gentle isn't really my thing but I'll make some time to write something up. I might be able to help hopefully. Be prepared though.
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>>27506673
i'd read it.
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What about breezies?
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>>27523873
They are just bugs anon. You spray for them.
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>>27521038

>The next few days were uneventful.
>Jan took Jenny to school in the morning, then picking her up after noon.
>Jan had asked you what kinds of food you like, and what kind of foods were bad for you.
>Dinner was different and seemingly better every time.
>You also notice that you were given rather large portions.
>Jan said it was to help get meat on your bones.

>Meat.

>Almost forgot that they ate meat.
>Almost.

>Luckily Jan managed to talk you down from that panic attack.
>James' jokes didn't help any.

>"What? I just said we didn't plan on eater her anytime soon!"

>James had to sleep on the floor next to your couch that night
>You tried to let him have the couch, but Jan wasn't having it.
>Jan commanded with that tone that only a mother could.
>Saying that you were to enjoy the couch and James would be perfectly happy on the floor.

>"Right, honey?" She eyed him harshly.

>"Yes dear..." His pout was almost tear jerking.

>After a few minutes of silent breathing in the dark living room, you roll over on the couch and peek your head over at the man laying on the floor.
>You never really got a good look at him before.
>Always trying to not stare.
>His arms were thick, stretching out his olive green t-shirt.
>They kinda remind you of that big pegasus who was always shouting.

>His square jaw and wrinkly face reminds you of a mix between a dragon and a minotaur.

>You never did notice that scar before.
>There was a lighter color jagged line, running across one cheek, up to the bridge of his nose.

>You almost jump out of your skin when you notice his eyes staring at you.
>"You need something?"

"Oh, um... no... Goodnight."

>"Goodnight."

>You roll onto your other side, scooting up against the back of the couch.
>Breathing slower, you can't help but think about that scar.
>Trying to think of something else, you start counting sheep.

>Sheep turn into the ticks of the wall clock.

>Sleep claimed you eventually.

>A fitful dreamless sleep.
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>>27524043
>>James had to sleep on the floor next to your couch that night
thats not cool man

thats not cool at all
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>>27506673
>>27520365
>>27523872

We Lilly now.

>Be Anon, the alphaest male to ever drink a Natty Lite.
>And you got one of them faggy ass little ponies.
>Because human women refuse to get within 12 feet of you.
>In fact, you got the littlest one you could find.
>A goddammed filly little pony with a pink coat and purple mane.
>It was the girliest-looking one they had, so you went right for it.
>Perfect for what you plan to do.
>No, not enjoy companionship and filly snuggles, faggotron, something else.
>Whatever, you've just pulled up to your house after picking up this thing.
>You step out of the car and go around to the back to pop open the trunk and let the filly out.
>Some people might say that's a bad place to store a living creature, but fuck some people and fuck this pony.
>They need to mind their business and this pony needs to learn it's place.
>So you pop open the trunk to see the little filly pony inside.
"Get out, we're home."
>"Okay, master!"
>The filly jubilantly hops out of the trunk and onto the weathered asphalt, none the worse for wear from being stashed in your musty trunk alongside a spare tire and a six-pack of Natty Lite.
>Well, she looks wet, so that's something.
>Wait, how did she...
>Oh fuck!
>You check the trunk and see your six-pack of Natty Lite has been crushed and spilt it's budget nectar everywhere.
>Now you're down 6 cents of alcohol because of that fucking faggoty filly.
>Well, that'll make what you plan to do to her later even more satisfying, at least.
>You pull out the mangled pack of beer cans and drop it into a nearby trash can.
>Fuck recycling.
>The filly's already walked up to the front door of your house, busily shaking herself dry.
>You head inside with the filly right behind you.
>"So, what're we going to do first, master?"
>She sounds ready and happy to serve you.
>Perfectly innocent and ignorant of your plans for her, just as you want.
>Speaking of your plans for her, it's time to start on them.
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>>27524077
"I was thinking of... 'golf'."
>You open a closet and start searching through it for your chosen implement of discipline.
>"Oh boy, I've never played golf before."
"You're not going to play golf, but you are going to help me."
>You find the golf club and take it out.
>"Alright, master, what do I need to do?"
"Just lay your head on the floor and keep it there."
>"Yes, master."
>This is great, she has no fucking clue.
>You lower the head of the club next to her head and line it up to make your swing.
>You pull the club back and then make a mighty swing at the filly's head!

>The club instantly stops when it hits her head.
>And the filly seems to not be hurt at all.
>What.
>The.
>Fuck.
>This is not happening, it can't be happening.
>It's just a faggy-ass filly, you're a big tough, strong man!
>You can't be weaker than this thing!
>You must have, uh...
>Forgot to actually swing, yes, you didn't actually swing and just brought it up to her face gently on accident or something.
>Yes, that's the course of event's we're going with.
>You just need to swing it for real this time and this fucker will suffer for your amusement!
>You pull the club back again and take another swing, putting your all into it.
>And the same thing happens again.
>How the fuck is this happening!
>You can't lose to this little filly.
>"I don't think this is how you play golf, master."
"Shut up, I know what I'm doing!"
>"Sorry, master."
>You're going to hit this thing until it fucking hurts, even if it takes all day!
>So you swing again.
>And again.
>And again.
>And again.
>And you get the point.
>Nearly an hour later, you're exhausted and out of breath, nearing collapse, in fact.
>But you refuse to give up.
>You take one final swing at the filly.
>And something finally breaks.
>Unfortunately for you, it's the golf club.
>You are forced to give up the ghost on your attempted assault and collapse to the ground in a panting, sweaty heap.
>Fucking filly and her gay-ass super skull.
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>>27524052
>sp says it would be ok if they shared it.
>woken up in the morning of janny giggling and taking picture of them because they inadvertently were cuddling on the couch.
>Jan delete those now.
>lol nope these are going on facebook
>James just sighs
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>>27523684
Thanks anon but how do you plan to help?
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>>27517243
love the defiant look in her eyes.
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>>27520701
pleased to see this is still going. now we've just got to smack a little submission into starlight.
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>>27524043
>>skipping over the meat scare
awwwwwww.
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>>27510316
>Playfully bats his hand away.
>This shatters his wrist fractures his arm and dislocates his shoulder.
this is how real horse "kicks" work.
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I'm back again.
Here's a sample of that new green I spoke of. Let me know if I should continue or not.

>you are Anon
>it's about 11 pm, or later and you're walking the straight dark alley, making your way to the closest bus station so you can get home
>and there's nothing you'd want more right now, than to already be there, it's damn cold out here
>you can already see the light of the street lamps at the end of your dark shortcut
>you're almost reaching the end and preparing to turn right. But, out of sudden:
>something of skyblue color jumps from behind the corner and crashes directly into you, making you fall on your back pretty hard
>as you vision clears from the shock, you can finally see what actualy happened
>there's a blue pony with rainbow colored mane and tail laying on your chest
>you also notice she has a strange, plastic-metal collar around her neck
>“Sorry hoomie, i'm in a hurry.“ she mumbles a bit mockingly
>then she gets up as fast as she can and continues running the way you came
>another figure comes from around the corner
>it's a rough looking man, dressed as if he just ran out of his house, grabbing only the first jacket he could find
>he's furiously tapping on some sort of remote controller
>“Fucking piece of shit thing, work! Work!“
>he noticed you, laying there
>“Sorry for that cunt.“ he says as he runs past you
>you turn around to see what the hell is happening
>it's obvious he's chasing her
>she has a good ten meters of lead, but of of nowhere, she collapses on the ground, screaming from pain
>it's that thing in the man's hand, looks like it works now


>>27514009
that's so sweet of you
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>>27524628

Not really much happened.
Self induced panic attack caused by poor turn of phrase and dad jokes, Jan talked her down before anything happened.

>You also notice that you were given rather large portions.

>Jan said it was to help get meat on your bones.

>Luckily Jan managed to talk you down from that panic attack.
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>>27515807
This, treat pone right and pone will treat you right.
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>>27524676
I still wanted to read it.
show not tell. yes nothing much happened to you, but I don't agree. and honestly its your story, but that doesn't change my feelings on the issue. you aren't going to convince me I'd have more fun if the story glossed over one of my favorite parts of pony/human culture clash.
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>>27524655

>he stops, still pushing the button, releasing always only when talking
>“You like it?! Huh?! I'm gonna make you pay!“
>you stand up and get close to him
„Hey! Stop it. You're torturing the poor thing.“
>“Yeah, I can see that and i'm enjoying every last bit of it. The unobedient bitch deserves it.“
>when people discovered this new specie called simply „ponies“, thanks to their peaceful and submissive nature, they started to use them as slaves for richer families
>helping with house, hard work, things like that. But of course it's known, though not entirely socialy accepted, that there are also cases of people owning ponies for „different“ things
„I don't know what she did, but that's enough. This is no punishment. You'll kill her!“
>“She can take it, just watch.“
„No! Just cut it out, I'm not gonna watch you doing that!“
>now it looks like you rustled his jimmies. He stops and turns at you
>“If you don't like it, then just fucking turn around and go wherever you came from. This is personal bussines. I can do whatever the fuck I like with my property.“
>he pushes the button again
>at this point, you had enough, so you grab the thing from his hands, smash it on the ground and stomp it with your boot
>the flow of electricity from the collar stops, but she still lays on the ground, unable to stand up
>“You have made a huge mistake buddy. Huge, huge mistake.“ says the guy with visible anger and delivers a punch to your face
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>>27524711

>it hurts like hell, you almost fell to the ground and blood is dripping from your torn brow
>“I told you to stop bothering me, but you just had to interfere. Now you gonna pay as well.“
>guy seems to be pretty choleric
>after two or three seconds of the his talking about how exactly you fucked up and how studid your decision was, the shock is gone and there's something else replacing the pain
>your heart races and adrenaline flows like you're about to explode. What the fuck is this guy thinking? That he owns the damn world? That he can hurt or kill anyone he wants without consequences?
>all this anger gives you strenght to do something you haven't done in a long time
>you turn around quickly and without any response, you punch him back with all your might, just in the middle of his sentence
>you're no fighter, but this was enough to stagger him for few short seconds
>this is such a fucked up situation, you either beat him to unconsciousness, or he'll rip you apart when he'll recover
>“You...“
>you have no choice but to to keep beating him, until he drops down
>so you punch him again, this time to the side of his head
>and again
>and again
>after few more consecutive punches, he's laying on the ground
>Jesus fucking Christ, did you just fucking kill him?
>you reach your bloodied hand to check his pulse, he's alive, only unconcious
>phew
>now, to the pony
>she's still laying there, shaking
>you come closer and notice her wings are tied together and her feathers clipped
>you place your hand on her shoulder
>she finches, turns her head at you and gives you the most terrified gaze, anyone ever gave you
>she tries to say something, but it's hard to tell what
„Calm down. Ok? Just calm down. Shhhh.“
>it's hard for you to look calming, because your hands are visibly shaking like an old man's
>you haven't been in a fight like this in years
>after some time spent trying to cradle her into calmness, you can understand what was she trying to say
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>>27524741

>“G-go away human. Pl-please, leave me be.“
>her voice is strange, it feels like it „crackles“ now and then
>but for God's sake, couldn't she at least show some gratitude?
„Look, I just almost killed the guy to save you. So you should tell me what the hell is going on.“
>“I-...“
„Go on?“
>“I bit him.“
„Bit?“
>“He forced me to stick it my mouth and I bit him.“
>oh
>“W-we are proud specie, he won't tell me to do things like that for him.“ she continues, still shaking from the electric shock
>looks like her will is stronger than her body
>she's trying to stand up, but barely staying on her legs
>“I need to go. Gotta get f-far away.“
„Far away? They'll catch you anyway if they'll see you walking around.“
>“Don't say things like that!“
„I'm just stating the truth. If he really owns you, he has the owning documents and police will bring you back to him.“
>“I ate them.“
„You what?“
>“I ate the documents before I ran away. I-I'm a free pony now. “
>you facepalm
„Jesus. That just means they will bring you back to the auction and sell you to someone else.“
>“That isn't true! It can't be!“
„Have you ever seen such a thing as „free pony“ around here?“
>“That can' be true...You humans will never own me!“
„Hey calm down. It's not my fault. I don't like the way this goes either.“
>she sniffs, as if about to cry, but too proud to show a tear
>“I AM a free pony. I'd rather die than be a slave.“
„Well, technicaly you're free. At least for now. I won't stop you. What's your name anyway?“
>“Rainbow Dash.“
„Huh, did he name you like this?“ turn around at the unconciouss guy
>“No. That is MY name. My real name, which is the only one I will bear proudly.“
„Ok, ok.“ you laugh „My name is Anon.“
>you offer her a hand
>she doesn't follow, but looks at you with strange look
>“You're different from the others...And I didn't even thank you for what you did.“

Moar?
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>>27524753
I kinda wanted the other guy to beat the shit of your MC for not minding his own business, so no.
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>>27524753
>Moar?

Duh.
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>>27524770
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>>27524794
He asked for an honest opinion, not for people to lick his ass because they're thirsty for any green.
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>>27524753
Hmmm Different in that there is more than one pony this time so there are ways around him getting her outside.

Maybe or maybe not going to be any really romantic stuff going on. I'm interested in what's going to happen. Or is she just the first of many ponies he saves?

Her wings being clipped sucks pretty hard.

But i'll read it.
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>>27524770
Pic related

>>27524753
Seems good. Couldn't follow your previous story because ponies with human name trigger my autism, feel too weird.
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>>27524753
>>27524741
>>27524711
>moar
seems more like anon is going to go to jail. he beat the shit out of that guy, it's assault. even if he cant prove the pony belongs to him, it's still true that he beat the shit out of him.
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>>27524891
Other guy hit first, that's self defense.
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>>27524770
Well, Anon in this story isn't really into DJing anyway.
But I respect your opinion.
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>>27524905
destruction of property.
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>>27524905
No it's mutual combat, and both people are charged with assault.
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>>27524909
>Well, Anon in this story isn't really into DJing anyway.
That's the sort of thing that makes writefags look childish.

>>27524890
It's not edgy idiot, if some prick came up and broke my shit and told me what to do with MY property I would put him on the ground, not that I would be so crass as to beat my slave in public anyway.
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>>27520701
One post, senpai?
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>>27524753
This board badly needs more dash.
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>>27510405
"Fine. Berry?"
>"Hmm?"
"Drink."
>She pushes a tumbler into your open hand.
>"Play."
>You grab the remote with your other and settle back into the sofa.
>Damn broken-ass thing sags under your weight.
>It's fine with two people, but three?
>Both mares lean in towards you, not enough to tip over, but enough the sofa feels pretty fucking crowded.
"Sure you don't want me to sit -"
>POKE.
>POKE.
>"Play," the pair say in unison.
>Fucking creepy ponies and their weird-ass anime cults.
>You hit the button and toss the remote onto the table.
"Happy?"
>"Mhm," little Butterhush moans.
>"Not really," the other mare grumbles.
>POKE.
>"Hush."
>You glare at Fluttershy for a second, then over to Berry.
>BOOP.
>She scrunches with the fury of a thousand suns.
"Yeah. Hush."
>"But -"
>POKE.
>BOOP.
"Hush."

>You snatch up the remote and pause the show as the first episode comes to an end.
"So, I can stop this now, right? Want to pick out something else to -"
>POKE.
>"No," Fluttershy answers with a shake of her head. "Play."
>GENTLE POKE.
>"Play."
"Fine."
>You sigh and hold out your empty glass to Berry Punch.
"I'm gonna need another."
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>>27524770
Bitch I will be proud to break your knees then.
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>>27525531
>Berry sighs and scootches forward on the sofa.
>"Fine. Hold it steady."
>She picks up a bottle of ginger ale with her hooves - and the strawberry rum with her mouth.
>Ew.
>Pony spit all over your rum.
>Double ew.
>Ginger ale and strawberry rum?
>"It's not as bad as you'd think," Berry answers your raised eyebrow.
>POKE.
"Play?"
>"Drink?"
"Berry, another for our guest."
>"Fiiiiiiiiiine."
>NUDGE.
>What?
>The sudden change from POKING is -
>INSISTENT NUDGE!
"Play?"
>"Play," Yellowquiet sighs, giving in to gravity and snuggling up to your side.
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>>27514829
Only one person choose a letter....ouch
>You eventually decide that dinner was more important than working out
>You shift the truck into gear as you prepare to make a maybe 5 minuet drive.
>Turning towards the radio you decide to see what's playing
>You turn a few of the knobs and magically it came on
>"Hey there it's the 94.7 The Country Giant"
"Damn I haven't listened to them in a while"you mutter nostalgia overtaking you
>"In Country News...Earlier last night there was a police chase down the old mountain where the crook escaped by jumping off the cliff but during the chase one officer was injured. "
>Well shit you didn't expect the cop to get hurt but truth be told you didn't really care
"He chose to chase me after-all so it was his fault anyway"you justify to yourself
>"Now let's get back into some country"You hear the radio say as it began to play a song
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fBEBbgQEJy4
>Even if it was a little corny it was still a catchy toon.
>A better part of the song later
>You arrive at the grocery store hoping to find a easy parking spot by driving around the lot
>As you drive around the parking lot you see a parking space at the front of the grocery store.
>As you pull in you wonder what all you'll get
>Grabbing the pen and paper you begin to write down what you'll probably need.
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Proper feedback time again.

>>27497288
This was always a cute fuzzy story - the far opposite of some of the painful stories we have here - and I really do like it for that. Sarah/Grass Walker is adorable, especially with the little art pieces you did for her. Your writing has also noticeably improved since you started, so that's good as well.

Only thing I wish is that we'd been there to see her get her CM.

>>27524043
This story is also pretty cute, but you mentioned that you don't really know where it's going and that shows in it. If I can make a suggestion, focus on the interaction with one character at a time and then develop how Silver reacts to them. Your writing is good, and I'd hate to see things just tail off because you don't know where to go next.
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low quality bump
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>>27526089
>After two more episodes, the mare starts fidgeting.
>After the third, it becomes practically unbearable.
>After the fourth, you figure things out and pause the show.
"Fluttershy?"
>"Mmmm?"
"Go to the bathroom."
>Silence.
"You have to go, don't you?"
>"Yeah, but... do I have to go *here*?"
"FUCK NO. BATHROOM, DOWN THE HALL."
>You point. Then point again.
>Then use both hands.
"THAT WAY!"
>"Mmmmmkay."
>She rolls off the sofa and scampers away before the echoes of your shout die down.
>You and Berry Punch exchange looks.
>A door slams.
>"I hope she made it in time."
"Me too. Shit, I do NOT need to clean that up."
>She stares at you, her mouth slowly twisting into a frown.
"What?"
>Berry shrugs and looks away.
>"Well, at least I know you don't have a piss fetish. Probably."
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>>27524043
This is super comfortable, but I agree with >>27526228 completely. The story is starting to show its lack of direction here and there, which is why so many of our archived stories burn out after the same white knight interactions occur with random ponies.

Consider giving more depth to Silver Spoon and a plot conflict of some sort. I particularly like how a Mother/Father taking care of a filly seems to change things just a bit. Maybe you could throw in a bit about Silver Spoon having abandonment issues, since in her past, family is taken away. Maybe she starts having a hard time letting them out of her sight? Or maybe she’s afraid to get close?
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>>27522671
>>27524498
By writing criticism like you asked…

It’s necessary to state for the record that the grammar in your story is a train wreck. If I were to highlight errors with a marker, there would be more highlights than white paper. Having that said, 4chan doesn’t really get strict about that sort of thing, and most sentences are readable, and the particularly bad areas are interpretable at least.

As much as that’s terribly distracting to any reader, the real problem is actually in what is said and I have a hard time describing this in a broad sense, so I grabbed a few sentences.

>>Be Dinky
>>You were enslaved and because of that you are now a slave

"What's your name" you ask stubbornly trying to maintain your stubbornness

>>"So....how are you"Anon says
>>Did he seriously ask that .....is he serious I'm a damn slave what do you expect
>"I'm a slave what do you expect"

>Remembering back you remember there being a documentary about this kind of shit but all you can remember is that they can't eat meat.

These lines are incredibly redundant and awkward to read. You have too many times when a character will think something to the reader, then say or do that thing right after.

On top of that, there seems to be a lot of what sometimes is called adverbial tags. Instead of saying Dinky said, an adverbial tag aims to modify it a verb with an adjective ending in -ly.

Dinky said lazily or You walked sexily etc. These are signs of bad description in writing, since they are used as a shortcut, rather than painting a real image.

This story also has a terrible habit with just cringy/stilted/ or absurd interactions that stretch suspension of disbelief far beyond the breaking point. Sometimes this stems from words being misused or just not making sense in context.
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>>27527064
>"Hay hold my wallet and if anyone bothers you just show it and they will most likely leave"
Does he mean license? If someone saw a slave with another person's wallet, they’d take it from them and bring them to police. What is this supposed to mean?

>Dinky is quick to just accept everything and acts unnaturally.

But sometimes the things that happen are just so absurd, it’s impossible to even get engrossed in the story.
>Anon finds a giant bowl a salad just at a fair because of… a hippy family?
>Dinky gobbles it after he slams it down and thinks smugly about waking her up? When she’s not sleeping?

It may be that English isn’t your first language, but still, a lot of this writing is just nonsensical or awkward to a point that it’s bothersome. The best I can offer is to just read more and wait a bit before starting a project again.
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>>27527074
Thanks for the honest criticism i'll remember that and work on it also i'll finish the story at a different time because it's obvious that i'm not ready for this kind of project yet hell I might gut the whole story and try and fix what I can.

Also English is my first language..
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>>27522671
>>27527205
Calm down.
Writing can be fun and sometimes it is... well... I guess you already know.

Your story raises a lot of questions.
Like if he was on a school trip, why didn't they try to call him when he went missing, or his parents or legal guardian?
Was there no way to smuggle it in the bus or just take it with him? It's not like winning a slave there is illegal.
Why does he steal all the time, is he poor? For fun?
Then the cop-chase with that jump. Like some action movie.
Some parts of your text are superflous, like this whole bread thing... you put much effort in things/action that don't seem relevant.
You don't have to describe every step he takes. Unless there is a specific reason for it.

Further more thieving is a lot about deception and distraction.
You run into someone to distract him from your hand in his pocket.
You put two items on the counter for which you pay and hide your stuffed pockets.
You sweet-talk and trick people.
Opportunitys where you just take stuff and go are quite rare.
Maybe you should watch some stuff about thievery and lockpicking and things like that.

I like the Idea though, and your characters are interesting.

Here have a slave, that will cheer you up.
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>>27524943
Unfortunately I get very little time to write, taking summer courses is literally eating up most of my time. But once finals are done I'll be able to sit down and get some more done, unless my acting career takes off and I end up being a full time actor.
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>>27527593
Motherfucker. That's what I get for posting in multiple boards at once.
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>>27527598
>Like if he was on a school trip, why didn't they try to call him when he went missing, or his parents or legal guardian?
I envisioned that this took place somewhere in the southeast of america where the school is very shity and the teachers didn't do there jobs and I also had a plan to explain his parents later on when dinky started to ask questions
>Was there no way to smuggle it in the bus or just take it with him? It's not like winning a slave there is illegal.
I was trying to make anon a very paranoid and rash character and
>Why does he steal all the time, is he poor? For fun?
Anon does it because he thinks its fun and it gives him a thrill.
>Then the cop-chase with that jump. Like some action movie.
Not gonna lie I may of been playing GTA 5 for ideas.
>Some parts of your text are superflous, like this whole bread thing... you put much effort in things/action that don't seem relevant.
I need to work out that habit hopefully.
>Further more thieving is a lot about deception and distraction.
I was thinking that anon takes any opportunities that are presented to him rather that seek them out like I said I was trying for a rash character.
>Maybe you should watch some stuff about thievery and lock-picking and things like that.
I also loosely based his thieving tendencies on my own
>I like the Idea though, and your characters are interesting.
I think the idea was the only good thing about this.
>Here have a slave, that will cheer you up.
Awww thanks anon
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>>27527795
>RDP!Dashie as a slave
>Rainbow Dash Presents: Skittles
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>>27526228
>>27527057

I do have some plans for conflict and plot.

But, I feel I should ask.

Should I keep going with the minute by minute of SS pov, or should I skip to where things are happening?
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>>27528868

>"Oh my god, so what's with this new collar? Its kinda cool, but it makes me call into question you fashion choices."
>"Same for this shiny belt, but you put it on wrong, how am I supposed to fly with my wings tied down?"
>"You want me to do sexual favors to you? Well, alright, but I just wanna warn you, I'm still a virgin, and probably wont be very good.
>"Oh my gosh! I ate so much cheese. Like, seriously! Gosh I love cheese. Too bad I'm lactose intolerant."
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>>27528905
I'm neither of those anons, but a fan none the less.

I would be comfortable with either. Just let it flow mang.
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>>27529051
oh god I read it in the voice
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>>27524043

>Mmm... warm.
>First thing you notice this morning, is being warm.
>Also that the couch is a lot warmer than last night, and that it is moving.
>And growling.
>Lifting your face out of your drool puddle, you notice a face at the end of the couch, looking up.
>And it's snoring.
>Oh, not roaring, snoring.
>Kinda the same really...
>The couch cushion moves up and down in time with the snoring.
>The arms wrapped around your back are nice.
>The scratching on your ears feels good too.
>Laying your head back down in your drool pillow, you start to nod off again.
>You hear giggling and a clicking noise.
>You ignore it for more sleep.
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The thief anon story is still going to be made but it will take time to fix it's current problems so here's a side project to keep your thirst of green quenched until then

>Be anon
>And you are currently a Sargent in the The Deadbeat biker gang
>And currently you are robbing a liquor store with one of your soldiers who's name you know is Elvis
>"Anon keep him down"You hear Elvis yell as he jumps the counter
"Whatever" is all you say as you grab the shirt of the store attendant and yank him over the counter
>As he lands on the ground you pull him up your mask covered face
"Okay buddy if you plan on walking out of here today then I would suggest you listening to us"
>"Please please don't hurt me"he says to you in a scared Nigerian voice
>Quickly growing tired of his whimpering you upholster your 44.magnum and pistol whip him knocking him out
>You drag the unconscious attendant into one of store aisles so no one would notice him or you
>"HOLY SHIT"
>Hearing this you quickly move into action jumping the counter and rounding the corner in seconds
>But instead of seeing a heavily distraught biker you see him carrying a giant safe of some kind
"What the hell happened I thought something went wrong"
>"Chill brother look what I found"
>You take a look at the safe with a questioning look
"What the hell is that?"
>"Hell if I know but it has to have something good"
"Fine whatever we'll open it back at the hideout"
>You both put your loot in the saddlebags of the bikes and speed off
"There better be something good in that safe"you mutter angrily knowing full well that your going to haft to lift that fucking thing.
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>>27529051
I love it.
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>>27528569
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>>27530965
Letting this thread reach page ten... shame on you.
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>>27480593
Picking up from that pastebin again:

> Everything after that is a blur.
> Anonymous' hands running through your coat, trying fruitlessly to brush out the water.
> Vision spinning as arms slipped around you, picking you up from the filthy ground.
> Anonymous' grunt as he slung you over his shoulders.
> Leg slamming into a hatch as he carried you back inside, producing only a pitiful whine from your lips.
> Being firmly wrapped in something soft and deposited on your back.
> The next thing you solidly remember is something hard being pressed against your lips, and fire flooding into your mouth.
> That at last finally kicks you from the haze you'd been drifting in - the alcohol serving as a brutal wake-up that snapped your neurons back into firing.
> He shouldn't be giving you liquor, not while you're still that chilled.
> Enough of your mind is still there to remember that fact from training; alcohol might save your limbs from frostbite, but the risk of shock as it chilled your organs was just as real.
"Nghhh..."
> The protestation that emerges from your lips is feeble and slurred, but manages to get the point across.
"No... no alc'hol."
> "Shh. It's okay, Spitfire. I know about the risk, but I can keep you warm enough."
> Even so you struggle a bit more - half on instinct, blind of any real reason - until he slips an arm firmly about you and pins back any further struggles.
> "Seriously. Drink a bit more, and I'll let you be."
> Giving up, you do - swallowing several more swigs of the fiery liquid and allowing its warmth to spread in your gut.
> At last he deems that you've drunk enough; the bottle is removed from your lips and briefly your owner departs.
> In his absence, your mind wanders - falling back into the haze of emotions thoughts that had brought you to this state in the first place.
> You're barely able to hear, let alone focus enough to see, and so Anonymous' return catches you by surprise.
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>>27531351

> Even moreso when he sits down in the bed next to you, pulling the blanket up over himself and you both.
> Trying to ask why only produces a few embarrassingly confused noises; apparently you'd used up your quota of words trying to warn him off doing anything further.
> "Shh. Just keep warm and stay still, okay?"
> Stay still - in your only semi-lucid state, the words barely hold meaning to you.
> His tone convey enough, however, and instead of struggling further you allow yourself to relax - head swinging up to nestle against the warmth behind you.
> Chuckling at the action, Anonymous lets you - again slipping his arms around you.
> "I swear to God, Spitfire. If you ever give me any shit about doing this for you..."
> Though you're far too hazy to comprehend his meaning, just the talking is enough.
> Your ears twitch, following his voice, and he seems to take note - continuing to talk in a gentle, relaxing tone.
> Despite the chill and alcohol in your belly enough sense stays with you to keep you from falling asleep immediately, but everything else fades to a blur.
> Time slips past in uneven bursts of lucidity as you drift in and out of awareness.
> Some times others seem to speak to you, or you even hear voice replying to them.
> Others, you're unable to produce more than a croak from your lips.
> At some point you realize that you're shivering furiously - your entire body shaking as warmth works its way back into you.
> There's no way Anonymous hadn't felt this.
> Embarrassment fills you; suddenly being wrapped up is something to be thankful for not only for keeping heat in, but because it at least hides the worst of your trembling.
> Following close on its heels is anger, a wild cocktail of emotion brewing within you.
> Anger at your useless state, unable to even stand up properly.
> Anger at the mistake that had gotten you here - a screwup that a first-day rookie shouldn't have made, let alone a veteran flyer and officer.
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>>27531404

> Anger at allowing your mind to wander when you were flying on a mission.
> Anger at the weakness that had cost Giselle her life.
> Anger at the slavery that had filled her with such a desperation to escape in the first place.
> Briefly you consider struggling free, but seeing as you cannot even halt the terrible trembling racking your body there's little chance of that.
> The anger burns itself out and despite your best efforts exhaustion creeps up on you in the tracks of the shivering fits.
> At last you give up, drifting off into a stark, dreamless sleep.
> When you next find yourself aware, you're no longer wrapped as tightly.
> Somewhere along the line Anonymous had unwrapped you, leaving your feathers itching as some had been shifted out of place.
> No longer constrained the towel surrounding our limbs you'd apparently taken the opportunity to roll over, scooting until you half-lay on Anonymous' chest.
> There wasn't exactly a lot of room on the narrow cots to begin with, but this was still far closer than you needed to be.
> Two aching legs and one stiff wing thrown over his body, while his arm wrapped around you.
> The position's intimacy sends a new wave of mortification through you and a flush to your cheeks.
> It's merely one additional thing heaped on the mountain of shame, though.
> Especially Discord had apparently seen fit to slip in and replace your muscles with wetted, soggy noodles while you slept.
> Trying to roll away from the mortifying way you'd gripped him only makes Anonymous stir.
> "Hey there. Welcome back to the world of the living."
> Grumbling softly, you finish rolling away before he can see the state of your face.
> That only drives Anonymous to shift both arms to wrap around you, which in turn only makes you further annoyed.
> A fact you illustrate with a frustrated growl.
> "Yeah, sorry..."
> He sighs heavily, laying his head back to the pillow.
> "About all of this, I mean. It's kinda my fault."
> ...what?
"Wha'?"
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>>27531404

> "I shouldn't have sent you out like that. I knew it was getting under your skin and you weren't all there. Shouldn't have sent you out like that."
> That - that was not what you had been expecting.
> And you'd hardly been expecting an apology in the first place.
> "So, yeah. I know this is kind of humiliating to you right now, and I don't even know if this makes it any better. But I am sorry."
"Like... like Tartarus it is. Was - was m'mind. Wandering. Should've focus-"
> "You weren't in any shape to be focusing, and I could see it. Look-"
> Turning over one more time is just as problematic as it was the first and reintroduces your muscles to a whole orchestra of aches.
> You manage, however; twisting around to look him in the eye and growl.
"My. Mistake."
> After a moment Anonymous breaks eye contact, shaking his head with a smile.
> "Can we compromise and say it was both of us?"
> ...
> This human, seriously.
" f'I do, will y'let me go? M'feathers itch."
> "No. you need to soak in as much heat as possible, even now."
> When you don't respond, Anonymous cocks an eyebrow.
> "I could order you to. I can do that, you know."
"Bite a thundercloud. W'not on your world, m'a free mare."
> "Not right this moment you aren't. Unless you can climb out, and I'm guessing you won't."
> Dropping your chin to rest on his chest, you roll your eyes.
> If there'd been any strength left in your muscles to fight that claim, you would have been up and struggling in an instant.
> Though as much as you hated to admit it, this was probably the warmest you'd been since you'd found yourself back in Equestria.
" 'guess..."
> "No shame in enjoying this a bit, Spitfire. Not everything has to be a fight or a contest."
> Cheeks flushing red, your eyes narrow to glare at him.
"Not what I was going to say!"
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>>27531432

> "I did mean it, though. I never promised you an easy ride, but I did promise that I'd look after you if y'worked with me. You have, though, and I just pushed you when you were hurting. Got ahead of myself - should've flown on and looked for a better landing spot."
> He sighs, and suddenly you're aware of just how upset he actually sounds - something that you hadn't quite gotten to you earlier.
> "You even decided to stick around, and I thanked you by nearly getting you killed."
"...can take care of m'self."
> Anonymous simply raises an eyebrow, and you can feel your cheeks grow warm again.
> "Whether you can or you can't, I was supposed to look after you. Doesn't matter why - as captain of this aircraft, as your owner, or even just as your friend."
> Surprisingly, you find yourself not particularly caring at his mention of owning you.
> That tone in his voice, though...
"I guess... we're both feelin' th'same way. Hurts t'lose someone who y'were thinkin' of as yours."
> He makes a small affirmative noise.
> "Trust me, I know..."
> ...
"Hey, 'nonymous?"
> "Yeah?"
"Thank you."
> "Welcome."
> ...
> "You want some food?"
"Tha' sounds really good righ' now."
> Anonymous slips out from beneath you, leaving you alone in the bed again.
> By the time he comes back - a mug in each hand - your muscles had recovered some.
> Limping and staggering, you'd managed to plod your way back to one of the bubble-like canopies, collapsing on the platform beneath it and dropping the blanket by the side.
> It leaves you feeling like you'd just been clobbered by a gang of bodybuilders, but
> Setting down the steaming mug down in front of you, Anonymous nods.
> "Enjoy."
"S'this... oatmeal?"
> "All we've got left. After this we're foraging."
> Right now you're not really in a state to consider the full implications of that statement, and instead bury your muzzle in the mug without a thought to modesty or manners.
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>>27528905
It depends where you think your good content is. If you think you have something more interesting down the line, you don't necessarily have to do through the motions to get there.

Specifically I mean you can go into 'tell form' prose to speed up with anything you think isn't interesting or won't add too much to the story:

'Over the next few months, you got used to the family you stayed with. Eventually they refurbished an old guest bedroom and you got your very own bed, and even a few possessions. Things felt... strangely good. In particular, you came to be close with their daughter, Jenny, and it started to feel like the sister you never had.'

--

>Jenny looked up at you, a bright smile on her face as she held her favorite doll.
>She paused when she saw your expression though.
>What's wrong Silver?
"Oh... sorry," you say, rubbing a hoof on the back of your head.
>I was just thinking about my family...

And thus the next plot thing just starts up in a new scene.

etc
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>>27531449

> Anonymous takes a seat on the opposite end of the bubble canopy, facing you.
> He eats rather more smoothly.
> Eyeing him, you lift your muzzle from the mug just long enough to ask:
"How do you managed to deal with all of this so calmly?"
> "I try to not to be impressed by anything."
"Hah, hah. But seriously - sometimes I forget you're not completely unflappable, with all the stuff that comes at you."
> Anonymous gives a small smile.
> The kind that looks like he desperately wants it to be real, but can't quite force it to.
> "Good of you to say. It's experience, for one. It used to get to me a lot more. That, and just accepting to take things the way they are."
> More quietly, he adds:
> "Have to admit, I'm starting to wonder if this whole trip has been jinxed or something."
"Jinxed?"
> He leans back on the canopy, staring out on the night-lit sky and far bank of the river.
> "Cursed. Doomed. Every single fucking thing has gone wrong on it from the start, right back to being woken up in the middle of the night by the job call."
"We keep pulling through, though. Barely, but we do."
> "It's costing us, though... sure, we got off the ice, but it cost us a lot of gas. We dodged the storm, but that cost us a big diversion. We got off the isles, but that cost..."
> There is a point there, you suppose.
> But...
"I-"
> You hesitate, trying to push out the words that you weren't certain of.
"I want to go back with you."
> Anonymous doesn't respond to that, keeping his gaze firmly fixed out the window.
"All the way back, I mean. Back to your world."
> Still nothing.
"If this is one of your being-unflappable moments, it isn't-"
> "Don't make big choices like that until you know for certain, Spitfire."
"Don't think you can guess what's going on in my head."
> "No need to guess. I can hear it in your voice."
> Damn.
> Hadn't kept that so much out of your tone as you'd thought.
"I know, but - what am I going to do here?"
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>>27531351
>tfw you killed off the cute birdbutt
hitler
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>>27531502

> "Be free. That's what you've always wanted, isn't it?"
"Free for what, though?"
> Your head hangs, eyes on the bottom of the empty mug.
"If just a glimpse was enough for them to kill Giselle-"
> "Spitfire. You've barely seen what your country is like, let alone how ponies - not griffons - are doing. You said some of the Princesses are still up in the north, right?"
"Well, yeah, but-"
> "Then go find them. Get me to a governed zone and leave it at that."
"Are you trying to get me to run away or something? Cost you even more money?"
> "No, but - hell, you always said you didn't want to be a slave still. I don't want you stewing in anger forever."
"I don't. But maybe -
> You spit out the words each.
"Maybe I like being part of a team again. Maybe I like being up in the air with someone who gives a flying feather about me and what I want!"
> "What, are you making me out to be some kind of bleeding-heart type now? Because I'm not. I'm not some loudmouth kid waving a sign in the streets for you lot to be free, or hiding teary-eyed pony kids from the police. I fly - it's what I do."
> Through the entire exchange, Anonymous still hasn't looked back at you.
> "Get this, Spitfire: You're not my copilot because I care about you - I care about you because you're my copilot."
"You care, though. Why doesn't matter. Even just that you know how I feel about being a slave and don't just dismiss it or pretend I'm going to change."
> Forcing yourself up onto four legs again, you stagger to his side of the canopy and lift a hoof to put it on leg.
"That you bothered to give Giselle a proper burial, even though she was 'just a slave' - that matters."
> Falling down on your haunches again, you sigh.
"And right now... right now, I appreciate that. A lot."
> After a moment, Anonymous scoots over slightly - shifting to sit next to you and slip an arm over your withers.
> Even though you have a choice in it this time, leaning back against him doesn't seem nearly as bad either.
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>>27531520

> He's surprisingly warm, or maybe you'd just forgotten how cold you still were.
> After a moment Anonymous takes note as well.
> The blanket you'd dropped nearby is grabbed and replaced around you.
"Not going to lie. I've been pushing myself to be the one supposed to be looking out for everypony else for so long that it feels kind of good to have someone caring about me again."
> He nods as he finishes wrapping the blanket up.
> "No shame in that. Teamwork, no?"
"Yeah. That's how it was with the 'bolts... everypony looked after everypony else."
> Anonymous seems to be about to say something, but cuts himself off when you sink down and forward to drape your neck across his legs.
> When he doesn't pick back up after a few moments, you add:
"Like you said, 'if I ever hear you giving me any shit about this'..."
> "...I wasn't going to say anything."
"Good. Because you're warm, I'm cold, and I've officially run out of care for how this might look."
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>>27529544
>Actually doing it.

You madman.
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>>27528868
>>27529051

what the heck is RDP!Dashie?
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>>27531704
It is now required that newfags watch the following video.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_AbtCTbSWTk
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>>27531723
And so it will be.
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Have you whipped your mares and rode your stallions today, slave pone general?
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>>27531818
I've ridden my mare, while my whipped stallion rode me, if you know what I mean.
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>>27525531
>BOOP

The mightiest weapon in any anon's arsenal.
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>>27529544

>In the morning, everyone went their daily activities.
>Though James kept stealing weird looks at you and blushing from his spot in the chair at the far end of the room.
>Other than that, everything felt normal.
>Jan had just gotten home from dropping Jenny at school, when there was a strange beeping sound.
>It was coming from a strange rectangular stone James pulled out of his pocket.

>"This is Jimmy."

>After a series of 'uh-huh's, James put the thing in his pocket and stood up.
>Jan made her way to stand besides him immediately.

>"What was that about."

>After kissing his wife, he looked at her worriedly.

>"Sorry hone, but I just got called in. I'm being shipped out tomorrow."

>Jan mods solemnly.

>"You be careful out there, promise me."

>"I promise."

>After a kiss James went to their bedroom and came back out in a strange outfit and a large bag.
>The jacket and pants had strange green, brown, and tan squares all over, seemingly without any pattern.
>He had a strange looking hat, made of a red cloth, looking squashed down and slightly off to the side with some badge on the front.
>The large bag was the same olive green as his shirt, slung over his shoulder.
>Jan and James kiss again.
>With a yearning look, she stood in the door way as James went to his carriage.

>With a loud roar, his carriage came to life.
>From the window, you can see a badge shaped like a running horse on the front of the carriage gleam in the sunlight as he pulled out of the driveway and sped off down the road.

>You look on, the scene confusing and saddening all the same.

"Janny? Where's he going?"

>Jan turned and knelt to give you a tight hug.
>She tried to hide the sniffling.

>"He's on his way to work."

"Oh... what does he do?"

>Pulling back from the hug with a tear filled smile.

>"His job is helping ponies get away from bad humans."
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>>27531842
Now that takes talent good sir.
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>>27532375
I don't think you know what he means...
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>>27529823
>After some driving you finally make it to the destination
>The Hideout Saloon...Yes that's it's fucking name
>Truth be told it was a old saloon but it is the gang's favorite hide out
>Pulling into the entrance you are greeted with Andy the gang look out
>"What's that"He says gruffly
"It's something I took from the liquor store"you explain not really giving him any attention
>As you enter the Saloon so you can make the walk to your boss's office
But as you walk you are given many warm welcomes by many fellow gang members as they see you walk past
>After you finally make it to the managers door you knock three times to signal that it was you.
>"Come on in"you hear him say behind the door
>You slowly walk into the office and sit down in the chair by the door
"Yeah it's me captain"
>"....So what do you need anon"
"Well remember that liquor store you told us to rob"
>"Yes?"He said not even looking at you
"We found a safe while we were there"
>"Well....what are you waiting for we keep tools in the garage so open the fucker"
"Okay caption" you say as you walk out of the door
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>>27532382
>As you are walking to the garage you see Elvis chatting up some bird
>You walk twords him you tell him to follow you into the garage
>As you both enter the garage you hear Elvis talking but you ignore him and instead you grab the crowbar on the table
"Elvis could you help me open this thing?"you say as you hand him a chisels and a hammer
>"Sure brother" you hear him reply as he starts to bang on the front of the safe
"Y'know were not brothers right"you say gruffly to him
>"I know"he says as he hits the chisel
"Then could you stop calling me that?"you say as you put the end of the crowbar into the front of the safe
>"But why don't you want me to call you brother"you hear him say as you put as much force as you could mustter on the crowbar
"Because *Sigh* were not really brothers" you say hoping that will satisfy him
>"Of course we are"you hear him say as he drops the tools "the moment you put on that jacket we are more than friends or even neighbors were brothers"he said pointing at you
"Okay man "you say getting back to work at getting the safe open
>"Fuck it" you hear Elvis say as he kicks the safe as hard as he could
>"Ouch .Ouch.Ouch.Ouch!" Elvis yells as he holds his foot in pain
"What were you expecting" you say trying and failing at holding back a laughing fit
*Bop*
"Holy shit that acualy worked"you say you say supprised
>Looking inside you see a lot of rubber banned hundred dollar bills and other expensive looking items
>"holy..shit"you hear Elvis say with a bewildered look on his face
>Quickly getting over your own shock you grab the bills and begin counting.
"You gonna help me or not"
>"Oh right sorry" you hear Elvis say as he gets back on his feet
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>>27532389
Did I do good?
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>>27532309

>Wiping her eyes, she stands up and walks to her bedroom.
>She comes back with her purse on her shoulder and a collar in her hand.

>"Are you ready to go pick you out a new bed?"

>The change is subjects was jarring, to say the least.
>But you could see she didn't want to talk about James' job anymore.

"S-sure. That sounds great."

>You take note of the collar.

"What's that for?"

>Jan frowns at the collar in her hand and kneels down to you.

>"I don't like it one bit, but there are laws that ponies must have a collar and leash with out with their owners."

"Oh... okay."

>She slips the collar around your neck and stands up.

>"But I don't think you need a leash to get in the car, right?"

>Getting into the carriage, or "car", was a little tricky.
>The seats weren't made for ponies.
>The handles on the doors can't be opened without fingers.
>The seatbelt was to tall for you, the shoulder strap running diagonally tight across your muzzle.
>But once you were situated, and Jan pushed the strap behind your head, it wasn't so bad.
>It was also nice being outside the house for change.
>And the windows on the side were neat.
>Some kind of magic made them grow and shrink up and down to fill the side, or let the breeze in at the twirl of a handle.

>When we reached a big road Jan called the freeway, you've never seen so many cars in your life!
>There had to be fifty cars on this road at once!

>Eventually, we pulled off of the big road and were now on smaller roads, all crisscrossing between giant glass buildings.
>Many of the buildings had brightly painted signs at the base, above the doors, advertising their goods.
>A few signs were disturbing, on signs with a big golden M they had pictures of sandwiches with big slabs of meat in the middle.
>Eventually the car stopped against the sidewalk outside a store with different styles of beds and couches seen through the large glass windows.

>"We're here."
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>>27531539
That was pretty damn touching.
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>>27495849
This update was admittedly really dry. Asking Gilda questions led to at least a little character dev but most of the interactions weren't very interesting to me. Furthermore, the leaving hook was two characters who don't get along going on a walk. I personally have a hard time being hyped right now because of that leaving plot point and how 'meh' this update was, especially when I compare it to the last one. The story has been really strong up to now but it feels like you weren't sure what to do here.
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>>27532690
Agreed.
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>>27532389
Just a small sample until tomorrow.

>Sixteen minuets later
>You and Elvis have just finished counting the money
>32,000 in total
>Looking over you see Elvis drooling
"Okay man you helped me get this money so it's only fair"you say earnestly
>Taking out your phone you go to your calculator app and begin crunching numbers
"Okay doing some math on my phone it says that we should both should get about 16,000"
>"Holy shit man we should be celebrating"You hear Elvis yell excitedly as you begin to divide the money
>You put your share into a dufflebag as you leave Elvis's share on the table for him to pick up later
"Yeah you do that i'm going to hit the town and see what appeals to me"
>"Wait.Wait.Wait.Your not staying" you hear him say sadly
"That's what I just said"
>"Oh well I hope you have fun out there"you hear him say as he walks backwards into the main room with a big grin
>Walking outside you hop on your chopper and rev the engine as you speed down the road without a care in the world
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>>27533397
>Three Hours Later
>Be anon
>And currently you are sitting on a park bench at night with a bottle of gin and a pit of sorrows
>Examining you surroundings you think of how you ended up here in this situation
>You think of all that you done in your lifetime
>You drink to these thoughts
>Wondering if you could actually find peace
>Putting your eyes in your hands you sigh a deep sigh
>Taking another swig of gin you start to feel it's effects taking hold finally
>In the silence of the night you hear a slight chatter and the pitter patter of foot steps in the distance
>In your druckin mind you think you should see the mysterious noise
>Walking slowly towards the noise and up a hill you see people entering a large warehouse
>And after stumbling down the hill and into the warehouse you are greeted with many unpleasant smells
>After a moment or two of stumbling around you see what appears to be a open area with some people inside
>Entering the center you hear someone start yelling random numbers
>"OH 2500 for the little orange one....Going one....Going twice....Sold to the man in the red glasses
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>>27533725
>In the still functional part part of your brain not burned out on gin you conclude that this was an auction
>And on taking a closer look it looks like they were selling those slave pony things
>"I want one" is all you say as you take another swig of the gin you still had clenched in your hand
>The next one that came out looked really nice
>"Alright boys and girls this here is a very special pony as you all can see"The auctioneer said while petting it's blond maine while also pointing at it's eyes.
>"So were gonna star at 500"
>Instinctively you raise your hand to place a bid
>"Alright 500 to the...To the scary looking biker"
>Looking around you see that no one else was taking the bid
>You also see some of the ponies looking at there blond friend in sympathy
>"Sold the biker"He exclaimed
>you drunkenly walk to the stage to collect your prize
>"Hey buddy you need cash up front"you hear the auctioneer say as he opens his palm
>Opening your dufflebag you pull out a large amount of money not even caring if you got the wrong amount
>"Anyway buddy here's a leash and a collar enjoy"you don't even resister what he said as you drunkenly grab the stuff and leave the warehouse.
>After a slow walk you make it to your bike
>As you sit back on the bench you throw up behind the bench and promptly passed out
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>>27533738
I'm interested in what you anon's think of the green so far because like I said I wanna improve.
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>>27533762
Liking it so far, did he buy Derpy, and is she going to make him happy?
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>>27533762
Angry biker saving pones when?
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>>27533777
>did he buy Derpy,and is she going to make him happy?
Yes he did buy Derpy.
>>27533787
>Angry biker saving pones when?
No clue honestly.
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>>27533738
I just finished the pastebin
http://pastebin.com/5Kpt6ywn
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Mare is for riding, but she has a weight limit
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>>27531404
>> Even moreso when he sits down in the bed next to you, pulling the blanket up over himself and you both.
>> Trying to ask why only produces a few embarrassingly confused noises; apparently you'd used up your quota of words trying to warn him off doing anything further.
aw yeah its happening
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>>27531539
this is why this is my favorite story.
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>>27524943
We should be grateful our green sugar daddy is confirming the story isn't ded.


This anon gets it: >>27524622
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>>27524753
Good Begin!

I like Rainbow still keep your attitude and independent spirit, it means that their human had not had for a long time and came to damaging enough to leave in a "Skittles" state, go ahead with your story and show us what will happen in the future
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>>27532429

>After getting out of the car, Jan clipped the leash on and walked you up to the front of the store.
>Inside the store was beds and couches and chairs, and couches that turned into beds.
>After a few minutes of walking around, and looking at the furniture, a woman walked up to Jan.

>"Hello, can I help you find anything?"

>You and Jan eyed her strained smile.
>Jan's attitude was surprisingly cheery.

>"Actually, yes, could you help me find a good bed for my pony, here?"

>"Ahh... sure. of course."

>"We have a selection of smaller and cheaper beds for children who are just getting out of diapers."

>She stops at a small lineup of small beds, the posts and frame are made of metal slats that squeak and rattle with the faintest touch.
>Jan helps you up onto the mattress.
>You sit and lay down, rolling side to side a bit.
>Loud crinkly plastic that is sure to make you sweaty and uncomfortable.

"I don't like this one... do you have anything softer and less crinkly?"

>The woman almost snorts indignantly that you had the gall to speak up to her.

>"Well, we do, but I doubt that your owner would want to spend too much on you."
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>>27536248

>Jan leveled a glare at the woman for that.

>"Well, that is for me to decide, isn't it?"

>Hopping down, you follow Jan following her over to a line of small beds, but clearly for older children.
>One bed catches your eye.
>A deep stained wooden frame with fancy carved posts, and a large poofy mattress.
>After hopping up and rolling around, you're amazed to find this bed feels even softer than the couch back home.

"I like this one."

>"Yes, well, this one is terribly expensive, especially for a pet."

"What did you just-"

>Before you could finish your though, Jan had already stepped forward.

>"Looks like I'm purchasing this bed."

>The woman sputtered at that.

>"Eh, uh. Well, okay, I'll write up the recite."

>After Jan had given the lady a hand full of paper, (not a single gold coin, humans are weird) a man with a large box on a cart stepped forward, and loaded the box into the back of the car.
>More fumbling with the car's seats and belts, and we were off.
>You were confused at first as to what Jan had in mind.
>But after coming up to a shop with a sign shaped like a giant pair of glasses, it became more apparent that a new bed wasn't the only shopping to be had.

>Walking up to this building was a different experience.
>Primarily being instead of a grumpy woman, they were immediately greeted by a man with a warm grin.

>"Hello, how can I help you two today?"

>You look up at Jan questioningly.

>"Well, my pony friend here needs a new pair of glasses."

>"Oh, well, I'm sure I can help."

>With a kind smile, he helped you up into a comfy chair.

>You pull off your glasses and look at them.
>The frames were crooked and scratched from being roughly handled by the foalnappers.
>The left lens had a smart crack running diagonally through it.
>The tape on the bridge was starting to loose its hold, you were planning to replace the tape soon anyway.

>You look up and the fuzzy shape of the man.

"Can... can you fix these? They... they mean a lot to me."
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>>27536348
>"Can... can you fix these? They... they mean a lot to me."
This is the most feelsy line ever written for this general.
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>>27533738

*Ring*
>You groan as you start to awaken
>You feel pain in your head from your late night drinking
>You also feel the sun shining in your eyes as you slowly open them.
*Ring*
>Not even bothering of getting off your back you answer your phone
"...hello..."Is all you say as it is to painful to talk
>"Anon it's me"
"Yeah captain...what do you want"You say as you bring your fingers to your eyes
>"Anon where the hell are you...Are you hungover?"
".....maybe...how'd you know"you say as you turn on your side hoping to get the sun out of your eyes
>"It doesn't matter just get back here I have another job for you"
"I'll be there captain...just give a few hours"you say as you hang up
>You should probably make your way there before something else happens
>Slowly but surly you make you way back to your feet
>You feel very sore and hung over as you stand
>looking behind the bench you see your bike
>As you get next to it you see a leash tied to the handle bar
>Looking at the leash you look at where the leash lead
>Then You see something very confusing
>A sleeping pony or if you prefer a slave pony
>Quickly getting over your confusion you decide to check your pockets to see if you did something regrettable last night
>As you empty out your pockets you see a paper with writing on it
>Taking the paper in your hand you read hoping to find answers.
--------------------------------------------------------------
Proof of purchase
Anon (That was what is said on his jacket anyway)
One healthy pony mare
500.00
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"Son of a bitch" is all you can say as you look at the note in your hand
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Any pranks Celestia would do to Anon? I'm getting back to Project Celly to see if things snap out a bit. But hey, if you want me to 'kill myself' then only consider this as a bump.
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>>27480628
Anon. How lewd
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I want to see one where they are in a slaughter house. A unicorn watches as a mother trys to save her foal. Ends up dying in the process, and the unicorn watches as the foal get its head slammed on a steel bar. And the unicorn snaps. Jolly gorey bloody mayhem ensues as the unicorn begins slaughtering the workers of the slaughter house. Bonus points for use of the machines and tools.
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>>27537516
Link?
I barely remember that.
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>>27537641
Here, senpai: http://pastebin.com/mwZ3hvYz
It has 666 views... somehow.
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Anon who did that Cadance drawing yesterday here. Did this, WIP. Is it okay so far? I'll change the ears when I wake up.

The drawing is a bit plain, I would like to add some more to the drawing but don't know exactly what. What's the scenario behind the picture? I was thinking of putting a garter belt and stockings and maybe a Vietnamese Ao Dai or something like that on her, extend the rope bondage into a shibari BUT I'm completely open to better ideas. I'm open to anything.
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>>27537700
Sauce?
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>>27537700
The horn feels kinda off.

Freaky without a mane.

Other than that, pretty good so far. You should maybe get yourself a trip so that you don't have to say "I'm the guy who did drawing of X"

>>27537720
There ain't any. He made it himself.
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>>27537762
I know. He should have the uncensored pic somewhere right?
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>>27537720
I drew it. There is no source.
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>>27537772
The uncensored version will be uploaded when the image is done
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>>27537864
Ah, right, thanks for the information... Now to wait patiently until that time has come.
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>>27536628
I'd say it's an improvement.
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>>27538005
Thanks anon I appreciate that.
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Satan has come for me bump
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>>27536348
that poor fucking girl. nobody in a lense store would be able to hand repair those. Silver spoon just doesn't know how human society works. at best they could make lenses that might fit the frame, maybe straighten it out a bit with tools, but thats only if they have an exact fit for a different kind of frame.
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>>27495849
Cont. from pastebin

>"Just hang on to them, we're gonna need them."
"No, we're not. For as much as I want you to be one, Gilda, you're not a fucking dog."
>"Listen, if you have to trust me on anything, trust me on this. I know we're gonna need them."
>You sigh, pinching the bridge of your nose
"Fine, fine. Just come on, already."
>Pushing the collar in one pocket, and the leash in another, you walk forward
>Gilda follows, still flying beside you
>You two just spent the last thirty fucking minutes arguing over whether or not you should take her stupid BDSM shit with you
>Eventually, however, you let her win
>Not because you'd rather be safe than sorry
>But because you were just getting tired of arguing
>Fuck
>You know you're right, but apparently that doesn't change a damn thing for her
>She just has to be a stubborn little shit about it
>...
>Why does that sound so familiar?
>"Hello, Earth to human?"
>Huh?
>Oh, Gilda's talking to you
>Turning to her, you raise a brow
"Huh?"
>"Did you even hear a word I said?"
>Yes, of course you did
>Every single word
"Not at all."
>You're incapable of lying sometimes
>...Did her eye twitch again?
>"Well, never-fucking-mind, then, if you're not even gonna listen!"
"What did you say?"
>"No, no, it's fine, really. I'll just shut my fucking beak. I mean, I'm just trying to actually follow Master's orders, is all. Nothing fucking important."
>You'll just ignore that little slip-up of her's
"Just tell me, you fucking cunt," you slip your hands in your pockets, taking note that you actually brought money with you, "This trip's gonna go a whole lot slower if we're not gonna bother talking to each other."
>The bird sighs, crossing her arms
>"Fine. I just asked you who this 'Maya' chick is--"
"'Maya'?"
>"Is that not how it's said?"
"No, it's not--you literally heard us say it earlier. It's 'Maya'."
>"But that's what I--"
>She rolls her eyes
>"Fine, whatever. I just asked you who this 'MAYA' chick is."
"Thank you."
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>>27539025
>As you two continue to travel, Gilda looks at you, expectantly
>And eventually, she speaks up again
>"So?"
"So, what?"
>"Maya. What'd she do to you?"
>Now, you're groaning
"Why do you care?"
>"You said she was worse than me."
"Yeah, and?"
>"I wanna know /how/ much worse she was."
"Why? You wanna get some pointers from her on annoying me or something?"
>"No, I just want to know, asshole. Especially when you're describing her as worse than me."
"Well, just know that she is--that's all I'm gonna tell you--"
>"Why?"
>Sighing, you look at the sky
"Maybe I just don't wanna talk about her--is that so hard to believe?"
>"No, but you said it yourself--it's gonna make for a long ass trip if you don't start yapping like no tomorrow."
>Normally, you'd combat this
>...But, sadly, this little shit actually has a point
>A point that you made earlier
>But a point none the less
>...
>Maybe you should talk about her
>Just for a moment or two--nothing drastic
>It couldn't possibly hurt, right?
>Sighing, you begin to speak
"Fine, fine. But I'm not gonna enjoy it."
>"Never said you had to enjoy it."
>Rolling your eyes, you start off at nowhere else but the beginning
"We weren't lying earlier, either--she /is/ worse than you, tenfold. Although, I think that's just because I knew her longer than I do you. Her effect was amplified over the years."
>"Well, when'd you first meet her?"
"High school, freshman year."

>JESUS
>DODGE BALL CAN GO DIE IN HELL
>Panting, you drop to your knees
>You need a fucking breather...
>You just narrowly avoided another dodge ball thrown at you
>This one was thrown at your face, no less
>Which would be all fine and dandy--you're used to dodging stupid shit
>...If, of course, you weren't the only one left on the team
>Adjusting your glasses, you stand
>You're tired
>You hate this
>Why the hell does your team suck donkey dick?
>You take a quick glance to the "out" section of the gym
>Oh right
>Today's game was 20/20 versus four-eyes
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>>27539074
Wait, is Gilda's master/mistress a dude or a chick?
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>>27539074
>Which doesn't actually make much sense
>Not everybody who doesn't wear glasses has perfect eyesight
>Some people just can't afford good glasse--FUCK
>THAT WAS DEFINITELY AIMED AT YOUR FUCKING HEAD
>Another one just barely missed you
>Thank God
>Although that just tells you that their aim is getting better
>...
>You should probably start throwing some of these balls back at them
>As you turn around to fetch a ball, another one comes soaring at you
>Once again, it barely misses you
>What the fuck is with you and these balls today?
>These guys can't hit for shit
>Picking up the ball, you turn to face the crowd
>Three of 'em still have balls
>The other twenty are just fodder
>This is a lost fucking cause
>You're tired
>You hate this
>You're gonna lose--the fact that most of the balls are on your side means nothing at this point
>Taking a deep breath in, you sigh
>Better make this one ball count
>You rush up to the mid-line, and with one quick movement of your arm, you toss the ball with an immense force that could shatter fucking brick walls!
>...
>No, you merely wish you did that
>What you DID do, however, is throw like a girl
>The ball just bounced onto the other side, lazily
>And after this event happened, you ran the fuck away
>And unluckily enough, a ball thrown by the other side managed to hit your ass, making you the last on your team to be out
>"HA! TAKE THAT, FOUR-EYES!"
>You swear if you had a gun this entire school would be gone

>"What the hell does any of this have to do with Maya?"
"Would you relax? I'm getting to that."
>"Sounds like you're taking your sweet ass time getting to it."
>You groan
"Fine, then. I'll just skip ahead

>You close your gym locker, sighing
>God, do you hate gym
>It hasn't even been a week of school, and you already hate everything about it
>Adjusting your glasses once more, you grab your book bag and start to speed walk out of the locker room
>"Hey, wait!"
>Keep walking, Claire, they're not talking to you
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>>27537700
Use the crop tool and rotate the horn to point a little bit more up. Right now, it is to far forward.
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>>27539093
Griffon-lady is owned by both "Myles" and "Claire", a male and a female, respectively
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>>27532309
>>"His job is helping ponies get away from bad humans."

My n ga
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>>27532409
Very good, continue my friend
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>>27539173
>"Four-eyes, wait up!"
>Keep walking
>You hear rapid footsteps behind you, getting closer and closer
>And all you try to do is walk away from them
>Sadly, this was simply futile
>A hand lays itself on your shoulder, causing you to look back at whoever the hell this was
>Some white redhead with brown eyes
>As much as you don't want to believe it, this gal was obviously the one who called out to you
>...And most likely the one who called you "Four-eyes" during gym
>Good, you hate her already
>She pants a bit before speaking with that pretty smile of her's
>"Jeez, girl! Can you hear, or what? I swear I was callin' ya for hours!"
>Your ears are perfectly fine
>Turning around fully, your raise a brow at her
"What do you want?"
>"Heh, aren't you a pissy one? Did your Mom eat your cereal today or something?"
>You don't eat breakfast
"I won't ask this again--what the hell do you want?"
>Giggling, she continues
>"Oh, I just wanted to congratulate you today on today's dodge ball game--I ain't never seen anybody with agility like you!"
>Agility?
>Is she fucking insane?
>You got lucky about a million times--that's it
"And?"
>"You also lasted longer than anybody else by yourself. I mean, dude, did you even see yourself out there?"
"If I could, then I'd be omnipotent."
>She raises a brow of her own at your dryness, still smiling
"Anybody could've done what I did out there--the fact that /I/ did it means nothing."
>Turning around, you walk away from her
>But, she's in front of you before you know it
>More reasons to put her as number one the "To Kill" list
>"Oh come on--you and I both know that's bullshit! What you did was fucking awesome--"
"About as awesome as water."
>You walk around her--nope
>She's in front of you again
>"Listen--I like you, four-eyes. You seem pretty fuckin' cool, with moves like that."
>She puts out her hand, most likely for you to shake
>"I'm Maya!"
>What?
"You mean 'Maya', right?"
>"No, no. Not 'Maya', 'MAYA'!"
>...
>What?
>But you--...
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>>27539278
>Oh, whatever
>Reluctantly, you shake her hand
"Claire."

>"...And you hate her for that?"
>You roll your eyes
"No. What do you take me for?"
>"An idiot."
"Says the bird brain."
>"Says the monkey. You want a banana?"
"Like you're any better--polly wanna cracker? Or maybe some worms'll be more nutritional."
>Besides for her growling, silenced welcomed you two for a moment before you decided to speak again
"If I hated her for that, then I'd be a fucking asshole. Do you not realize how nice she was to me?"
>"That's why I was asking."
>Looking at the sky, you continue
"Honestly, in the beginning, she was a nice friend--my only friend, in fact. She tried to introduce me to the pack of friends she had, but I didn't exactly fit in."
>"How?"
"I... don't really know how to explain it."
>Putting a hand to your chin, you think about Maya's friends
>Although, you don't remember much about them
>Except for their snottiness, maybe
>Even then, they weren't that bad
>You guess...
"They were just too "girl-y", if that makes any sense."
>"Girly?"
>That caught her attention
"Yeah. Sorry if that's not really--"
>"No, no! I get what you mean. I've met "girly" girls before."
>Smirking, you look at her curiously
"Really? I didn't know you knew people."
>She frowns
>"Fuck off."
>The smirk fades, but your curiosity stays
"Was it one of your previous owners, or somethin'?"
>"Aren't you telling a story?"
>How defensive
>The smirk comes back as you stretch
"Right, right. Maya."
>You take a moment to think about where you were
>That question you asked actually sidetracked you a lot more than you wanted to be
>Where were you?
>Uh...
>Oh yeah!
"Yeah, they were girly. I couldn't seem to attach myself to 'em as well as Maya did. Me and Maya stayed friends and all, I just didn't join her group of friends."
>Gilda nods
"And, over the years, I really grew to like Maya. She was a good friend."
>"Then what the fuck happened? Why the hell is she considered to be so much more worse than me?"
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>>27539369
>You frown
"Let's just say the last two years weren't as pleasant as the first."
>You pause once more, thinking of a way to say this
"Well... Have you ever had a falling out with a friend before," she nodded, "And then proceeded to hate that friend for the rest of your life?"
>She nods again
"That's what it was with me and Maya. I don't know what happened to her over the summer of Sophomore year, but when we came back as Juniors... she fuckin' changed."
>You sigh
"I honestly think she started to hate me, before I really started to hate her. Come Junior year, she was really into "play fighting" a lot more than before. Which never turned out good for me."
>Remembering all those "accidental" black eyes makes you cringe
>And it makes you rub your eye
>Specifically the right one
"And it all just got worse in Senior year. More punches, more pushing, more things being thrown at me."
>"Things like what?"
"Food, typically."
>Gilda giggles
>Your voice lowers to a growl
"It's not funny."
>"Oh come on, dude. It's at least kinda funny."
"You know, Gilda, I wonder how you'd like that. Everyday at lunch, you get something thrown at you that stains your clothes, whether it be crumbs of a cookie, or the sauce from a steak."
>"I don't wear clothes."
"If you did."
>"But I don't--it's not my fault you humans think it's normal to wear clothes all the time."
"Then imagine it getting stuck in your feathers, or your fur. You wouldn't like that, now would you?"
>The griffon ponders on that for a moment
>Then, she responds
>"I'd probably sock 'em in the jaw."
>For some reason, you smile at that
"Then you'll understand why I finally broke it off with her."

>You sigh
>Two more weeks, Claire
>Two more weeks
>You can live that long, right?
>Then you won't have to deal with that fucking cunt anymore
>Taking your lunch tray from the lunch lady, you mosey your way on over to your lunch table
>Where you sit right across from Maya
>Fuck everything
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>>27536348
>"Can... can you fix these? They... they mean a lot to me."

Adorable
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>>27539404
>As you sit, you shut your eyes tight
>She's gonna hit you again
>She does this every day at lunch
>OW!
>On fucking cue, she punches your arm
>Hard
>Her punches just get harder and harder every day
>"Hey, there's my four-eyes! What's up, dude?"
>The sky
>Your urge to kill
>Simple things
"Nothing much, May. What about yourself?"
>"Not much, dude. Although, I think Ms. Eisenhower has it out for me."
"The math teacher?"
>"Yup!"
"You don't even have her class."
>"Yeah, but, every time I walk by her she just fucking /stares/ at me."
"What did you do?"
>"Nothing! Honest to God, dude! She just /stares/ at me. Like I'm some sort of criminal or somethin'."
>Ms. Eisenhower might have the right idea, then
>You look down at your plate
>Hamburger and fries
>You lift the top bun of the burger, raising a brow
>Yup
>Just like you thought
>Fucking pickles
>You fucking hate pickles with a passion
>Looking up at Maya, you ask her a question
>Dryly
"You want these pickle slices?"
>"Yeah, sure, I'll take 'em."
>Picking up the pickles, you hand them to her
>And not a second later, the pickles are right back in your face
>Well, on your face
>As you sigh, you hear her laugh
>Laugh like a God damn mad man
"It's not funny."
>"Pfft, yeah it is! You should see the look on your face--it's priceless!"
>You stand, smashing your hands on the table
"What the fuck is your problem, Maya?"
>She looks at you, clueless
>"What do you mean?"
"You know EXACTLY what I mean, asshole. This is the umpteenth time you've thrown your disgusting fucking food at me--"
>"Oh, come on, Claire. It's just a joke--"
"A FUCKING JOKE!?"
>You fucking exploded, slamming your hands on the table again
"So I guess my entire fucking existence is literally just a joke to you, then?!"
>"What? What are you talking abou--"
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>>27539456
"Don't try to fucking act retarded! You know exactly what I'm talking about! Every day--every single fucking day you throw shit at me. Every day you hit me like I'm a slave. Every fucking day is nonstop with you!"
>She doesn't respond this time
"And you know what I've been doing for the past TWO YEARS putting up with this shit? I've said nothing, done nothing--I've just let you play your stupid fucking games and let you hurt me. Although, looking back on it, I don't even know WHY I did that!"
>Now she decides to stand, crossing her arms
>"The hell are you getting at, Claire?"
"I'M FUCKING SICK OF YOU, MAYA! I'M SICK OF YOUR FUCKING BULLSHIT THAT YOU PUT ME THROUGH!"
>As your balled your fists, your nostrils flared
>"I--Well... FINE THEN! A-And if we're being honest here, I think you look like putrid dog shit!"
"You look like the dead bird that the cat dragged in!"
>"You look like a whore!"
"And you don't, slut?"
>She growled, her hands clenching the table
>"You... You... YOU LOOK LIKE YOUR MOTHER!"

"I honestly think I blacked out after that. But the next day, I was suspended for the rest of the year for starting a fight. I asked a bunch of Maya's friends what happened, and they all said I knocked her the fuck out."
>"Dude, that's fucking awesome."
"No, not awesome. I had to repeat senior year for that shit. And instead of being a social outcast, I was fucking feared by all the underclassmen. It was fucking terrible."
>You two end up at a park
>...You have no idea /how/, but you're not gonna complain
>Taking a seat on a park bench you cross your legs
>Gilda follows suit--she even crosses her legs like you
>Yeah, she's not sitting like a dog this time
>She's sitting like a damn human
>And it's kinda weird
>You didn't think she could do that
"Anyway, after that, I never saw her again. And, incidentally, I'm pretty sure that's what made me become a pacifist."
>"You're a pacifist?"
"Well, I'm definitely not an MMA fighter, I can tell you that much."
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>>27539515
>The griffon giggled at that comment, making you smile
>"I'm not gonna lie, dude, I had something similar happen to me."
>You raise a brow
"Really?"
>"Yeah. I--..."
>She stops to sigh
>"I used to have a friend, way back when. I knew her for all of my life, basically. But, when I decided to visit her again... things changed. She was still herself, but..."
"It just wasn't the same?"
>She nods
>"And then, she even had this stupid friend of hers, getting in our way. And she had the fucking NERVE to actually "throw a party" for me."
"Your friend, or her friend?"
>She growls
>"HER friend."
>By the looks of it, it seems like her anger is getting the best of her
>Not that she has a "best" part of her to speak of, but still
>"It was a fuckin' set up, dude! Everything I tried at that stupid fucking party was a fucking prank made by her and her stupid fucking friend. I--I couldn't fucking take it! That she would leave me for her, that fucking dweeb of a pony--"
>"GET THE FUCK OFF THE BENCH!"
>What?
>Who the hell was that?
>You and Gilda look at each other
>You two share the same expression--shock
>Shock and fear
>Although, you're probably more fearful than she is
>You two jump off the bench--
>"No, no! Not YOU!"
>What?
>You look down at Gilda
>All she can do is shrug at you
>Out of seemingly nowhere, some guy with a fedora on--or is that a trilby?--walks up to you and Gilda
>He seems kinda overweight, too, by the looks of it
>The griffon then begins to float, so that she can be eye-level with this guy
>She already seems annoyed
>Although you're not sure if that's from him, or her story
>Mr. Trilby points at her, frowning furiously
>"YOU!"
>Questioningly, with a hint of snark in her voice, Gilda points to herself
>"Me?"
>"I'm not talking to the fucking tree, am I?"
>"I dunno, you look like the typ--"
"GILDA!"
>He just chuckled, putting his hands in his pockets
>As Gilda fell to the floor, you couldn't help but glare at him
>You glared in disbelief
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>>27539644
>And you glared in anger
>How DARE he
>How fucking DARE he!
>How fucking DARE he put his hands on her like that?!
>"Don't talk back to your superiors, slave."
>Slave?
>Oh hell no
>As you crack your knuckles, you walk up to this living shit stain
"Dude! What the fuck is wrong with you?"
>He turns to you, smiling
>"Oh! Hello there, m'lady," he tips his trilby to you, "Pardon me for a moment. I'm just showing this bitch her place."
>You grab him by the collar of his shirt
"Insult her one more fucking time, jackass, and see what happens."
>"Oh, is that one yours?"
"She's sure as hell not yours, I can fucking tell you that much."
>"Then you'll thank me! It seems disrespectful--you really should train your slave better."
>Next time he says slave, you're breaking him
"I'll give you five seconds to take everything you said about her back before I send you to the hospital."
>"I'm going to assume that it is yours, then. I really do feel like she's a disrespectful one, Ma'am--
"Five."
>"If you need me to train her for you for a couple days--"
"Four."
>"Then I can definitely do that! It would not be a problem--you don't even have to pay me--"
"Three."
>"And besides, I doubt that your weak woman hands could do anything to me--I mean, reall--"
"TWO--"
>"Claire!"
>You and the shit stain turn your heads to the griffon laying on the floor
>She's getting up now, with a smirk
>She's standing like that son of a bitch never touched her
>Impressive
>"Calm down, dude. I got this prick."
"Somehow, I doubt that."
>"Fuck off. I hit harder than I look."
>"Ma'am, you aren't really going to let your slave try to beat me up, are you?"
>If Gilda didn't say that she had this, he'd be on the floor by now
>Letting go of his collar, you cross your arms
>"What do you mean 'try'?"
>...
>You think she's growing on you
"And besides--I'm a pacifist. I couldn't hurt you even if I wanted to."
>Keep telling yourself that, Claire
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>>27539688
>One day, you're gonna break somebody's jaw if you're angry enough
>Shit, it happened with Maya
>...Probably
>The faggot speaks again, with this very smug smirk on his face
>...Kind of reminds you of Myles
>Except this faggot's smugness somehow makes you more enraged than Myles' ever could
>God, if you could punch him...
>"I'm fairly certain that this bitch couldn't harm me at all, ma'am--in fact, I'm sure that she'll be hurt more that I would--FUCK!"
>Well, seems like Gilda did it for you
>By sucker-punching this fat fuck in the gut
>The shit stain collapses to the floor, coughing furiously
>Is it bad that you're laughing?
>He holds onto his gigantic stomach for dear life
>As if it was his only child
>Gilda floats over him, smirking
>"What was that about not being able to harm you?"
>"L-... Lucky s-shot."
>"Then I guess this shot's even luckier."
>OW
>Sheesh
>For fuck's sake, you don't even have balls and you're cringing at that nut-shot she made
>You think he's crying now
>Heh
>You almost wish you felt sorry for him
>...
>No you don't
>Fucking bastard deserves it, after insulting her like that
>Calling her a slave
>Fuck him
>You walk over to Gilda, smirking
"Nice one, dude."
>"Thanks, dude. I had to show that loser what for."
>You snicker as the griffon floats over his body
>Once again, you chuckle at him
>He's lying on the ground, writhing in pain
>And you have no regrets
>You can only assume that Gilda doesn't have any, either
>As you two get away from the crime scene, you can't help but think back to what that faggot called Gilda
>A "slave"
>A slave for what?
>Cooking food?
>Ha, yeah, right
"Slave," you chuckle out
>The catbird looks at you curiously, stuttering out her words
>"H-Huh?"
>Er, word
"That guy. He really called you a 'slave', the dumbass. That'd be fuckin' stupid."
>"Hahaha... Y-Yeah, stupid."
>Huh?
>You look at Gilda, raising a brow
"Something wrong, Gilda?"
>"What? Pfft, no. Nothing's wrong with me, Claire. I'm perfectly fine."
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>>27539562
Ok. Now I need pet-anon greentext.
Where can I find one?
>>
shit nigga

rarifag just dumps novels dont he
>>
>>27539901
This is the exact opposite of what he's asking.
>>
New thread: >>27540057
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Spoons by Spoons
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>>27540064
Feels good man.
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>>27539831
"You sure?"
>"I'm fine."
"You don't sound fine--"
>"I'm FINE, fuck off."
>Sheesh
>You roll your eyes
"Fine, then. Excuse me for being friendly."
>Sarcastically, she chuckles before responding sharply
>"Friendly? You call that 'friendly'?"
>You stop walking to turn to her, your arms crossed
"It's sure as hell a lot more friendly than YOU'VE been, I can tell you that much."
>She does the same--turning to you and crossing her arms
>"Are you fucking kidding me? I'm not the one who threw fucking food at you like you're a fucking dog!"
"It's not my fucking fault that SOMEBODY isn't as trained as they should be. Maybe I should take up that guy's offer--"
>"You wouldn't DARE!"
"Oh, wouldn't I? Coming from the cunt who impersonated me, for fuck's sake? I mean, obviously, you should know EXACTLY what I'm going to do even before I do it, right?"
>She takes a moment to growl before she snarls at you, her voice becoming more tense as she speaks
>"W-What the hell else was I supposed to do? You were gonna tell him that I can talk!"
"And yet, you talked anyway--"
>"ONLY BECAUSE YOU FORCED ME TO!"
"I didn't force you to do ANYTHING! You brought that upon your fucking self!"
>Your nails are digging into the palms of your hands at this point
>And, by the looks of it, her claws are doing the same to her
>"Yeah, because YOU started it! I wouldn't have had to talk so fucking fast if you didn't fuck with me in the first fucking place!"
"Why the hell are you being so fucking secretive, anyway?! You don't want to talk, you don't want to tell us about you--what the hell is wrong with you?!"
>"MAYBE I DON'T WANT TO BE TREATED LIKE A FUCKING SLAVE AGAIN, HAS THAT EVER PASSED YOUR STUPID MONKEY MIND?!"
"WH--..."
>Wait...
>What?
>Suddenly, you become a lot less tense than you were
>However, Gilda looks like she isn't losing her anger any time soon
"Gilda?"
>As if you were Myles, you speak softly to her
>She turns away from you, her claws still balled
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>>27540180
>As you attempt to get closer, your voice becomes more comforting
>At least, you hope it is
"I... I didn't realize that--"
>A gust of wind blows your hair in front of your face, blocking your view
>And, when move your hair out of the way, you notice that she's gone
>Looking up in the sky, you see her gaining altitude
>She's quickly getting smaller and smaller
>But eventually, she stops once she's high enough
>And then, she blasts off into the city, back the way you came
>Thank God
>But, the thing is...
>She doesn't know where she's going
>But she doesn't know where she's going...
>For a moment, you stare at her fly in shock
>Then, you force yourself to bolt off after her
>You don't know how you're gonna catch her--or if you're even gonna catch her
>But you're not gonna go home without her
>Not only would Myles be mad at you
>But...
>...
>Never mind
>You just have to focus on catching her--or at least, following her
>Simple enough, right?
>God, you hope you're not wrong

To be continued soon
Pastebin shall be updated in a bit
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>>27539843
these kinda count as pony on top material

>>27506673
>>27510316
>>27510638
>>27510856
>>27512267
>>27519917
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>>27539831
Yeah, a slave attacking someone? That would get both her and her owners in some deep fucking shit, son.
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