Spider-Shim and her Amazing Friends! Issue #4

Ok

I'll get to writing.......some time soon......even though i'm the worst writer of the bunch.....

Where you at Beaner

>>26880041
Hey, fuck you buddy!
I already claimed the title of worst writefag in the thread.

>>26880076
DID YOU EVEN READ MY CRINGE!?

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>>26878404
>Like Marc labeled his map with a location, you should probably try to mark areas she’s spotted at as well…
>With a red pen from your backpack, you remove the cap and circle where you last spotted her on the fire escape.
>If you see her here and at the theatre, then you’ll be sure to mark these locations too.
>For now, you must wait.

“I should really find a better way of finding her.”
>You grumble.
>It’s night.
>Four hours have passed, and yet you still don’t see her.
>You are determined though, especially after what Marc said.
>The roofs in this area are low, and there are no buildings to web-sling on.
>Maybe you should hide on the roof?
>Nah, she’d spot you.
>The theater is closer to town, so she must come from--if Marc’s words are to be believed--the apartments, then makes her way into town.
>So yeah, you should be able to follow her in your van once you spot her.
>Follow her in your van.
>Note to self: try being less creepy if you actually meet her.
>Spider-Woman immediately jumps onto the roof from the direction of the theater.\
>WAIT.
>SHE CAME FROM THE OPPOSITE WAY!?
>GODDAMNIT MARK!!!!!
>YOU WERE GONNA FOLLOW HER HIPS IN YOUR VAN!
>...Man, you’re scaring yourself.
>Quickly you shuffle to grab your camera, and step out of the car.
>1…
>2…
>3…
>Say cheese, Spidey!
>Click!
>The figure recoils at the flash of the camera.
>Once she sees you there, she immediately turns back from the direction she came.
>Maybe you CAN make her go to theater.
>You immediately head into your car, and start to pursue her from outside of the city.
>She runs on the roofs of small houses, shops, but…
>You lose her.
>Damn.
>You slam your fist against the steering wheel.
>At least you got one picture.
>You can only hope she heads back to the theater now as you drive your way to it.
>...Wait a minute.
>Is that smoke?!
>About a few blocks down there’s a shit load of smoke…
>You drive towards it and your fears are confirmed.
>A fire.
>A big fire.

I think you're all special and unique snowflakes

>>26880041
At least pastebin it

>>26880110
>"Time to be an everyday hero Max"
http://youtu.be/1YSohrrP0VY

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>>26880110
>Meanwhile, in the fire

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>>26880110
your sins will haunt you

>>26880159
>Tfw sunset gets to watch that scene in my next update.
DIOOOOO!

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>>26880248

>>26880174
isn't it illegal to make pictures while you could be helping
failure to assist a person in danger [law]

>>26880365
What the fuck could he have done? Plus, with authority there, civilians aren't allowed to intervene.

>>26880174
>>26880403
Tell Anon to stop being a pussy
This is his big moment for his human torch powers to emerge

>>26880365
only in civilized countries like canada, germany, or france
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Duty_to_rescue

as >>26880403 says, he would only create more work by endangering himself there

>>26880174
SLANDEROUS LIES!

>>26880757
im about to go to sleep, will you post the real version soonish?

>>26880147
I lack a brain right now so go ahead and explain

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>>26880110
>The building is a large apartment building, one that is big enough to be in the city.
>Because at this point after chasing Spidey, you kinda are.
>Outside of the building is a good number of people covered in scorches and ash.
>The fire department barely arrived, it seems, but you pull over anyways.
>Stepping out of the car, you make your way to the people.
>A forty year old man coughing wildly tries desperately to break free of two firefighters’ hold on him.
>“MY DAUGHTER! I HAVE TO GET HER OUT, YOU DON’T UNDERSTAND! SHE’S ONLY SIX, SHE’S DYING IN THERE!!!”
>“Sir, it’s too dangerous to go in now! You need to--”
>He’s dragged off.
>You look at the building…
>Doesn’t look like a super-hero with a knack for shooting webs is gonna be here any soon.
>This looks like it’ll be on the Bugle tomorrow…
>Wait a minute…
>You grab out your camera.
>Click!
>Click!
>...A few more times just to be safe.
>Click!
>Click!
>Click!
>Cli--
>You refrain from taking another picture as you look at a window near the fourth floor of the building.
>A little girl screams for dear life from it.
>Shit is that the man’s daughter?
>You immediately go up to a fire-man.
“Dude! There’s still a little girl inside! Look!”
>You show him on your camera, and he looks at you sadly.
>“We can’t go up there--too likely it’ll collapse any second now…”
“But she’s going to die! Do something!”
>“I CAN’T!”
>He glares at you with sad eyes.
>You hang your head low.
“It’s too late for her...?”
>The fireman nods.

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>>26880839
>>26880156

>>26880858
time to climb up into the fourth floor and... oh who are we kidding, he can't do that unless a firefighter helps him
spidershim enter stage

>>26879882
inb4 jamal commissions.

Do you guys remember when Anon sang to Sunset in my green? That was nice, right?

Try to find the symbolism in it.

>>26881143
Fuck symbolism
What do you take us for, people who look into subjects deeply?

>>26881185
JK senpai pls don't kill me

>>26881143
symbolize anons dick into sunset, I could get behind that

>>26881223
Inb4 Sunset kills Anon with her radioactive spider-fluids

>>26881223
Sure. I can do that.

If you want a fix on sexual symbolism right now though, then try this green I wrote: http://pastebin.com/BdCLD0L6

(I implore you to read it, then report back with the symbolism you found and what you think it means)

>>26881143
You son of a bitch. I went through the pastebin. I still don't know whats happening, but I have a bad feeling it's going to have a lot of feels.

>>26881265
I'll give you a hint--it corresponds with how Anon sees Sunset

Try to find more

>>26881313
Beans-senpai stop being so deep for us

>>26881313
I already figured that anon would freak out after figuring out her identity and wonder if she was playing him and laughing at him behind his back. What I'm not sure of is how he would figure it out. I'm wondering if anons going to be less peter parker and more norman osborn

>>26881383
shit wait no
not norman, his son. I think his name was Harry?

>>26881402
You're a goblin, harry

>>26881383
Why can't we just have some greens that give us good laughs and doesn't go into grimdark territory? I swear I hear "Crawling in my Skin" every time a story turns dark.

>>26881436
It's not going in that territory for mine. Right now I'm just barely establishing the story. Hell I don;t even know if I have a conflict in mind.

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>>26879846
Never understood linking threads either wow i'm a scrub at green text writing.

>After what you said she just glares at you.
"How about you start Web Swinging Twilight and stop wasting time"
>She gives you a little salute and runs for the nearest edge of the roof and jumps of while yelling.
>"Spider Women ready for patrol."
>Yep that's right she is spider women web swinging wall crawling brainy hero of the city and protecter of many quite a cool thing to dawn at night ain't it the spider women thing is also quite popular. you''ll find it surpsing how different she is now when she's got that rainbow and black suit on her.....
>....I cringed at my own joke.
>You see twilight begin to web swing to the next building you feel more relief.
"What is it with people stomping on me?"
>I ignore it and just focus on what needs to be done I proceed to jump off the roof edge and follow twilight yes I do also have web swinging powers and i'll say it's all sorts of joy!
>Wait i have not told you who I am Crap short version names Anon I won't lie i'm a strange person and mostly a nobody and as you can tell also have another identity during the dark night Spider Man I guess.......don't know if I wanna stick with that but that's all you need to know about boring old me you want to focus on what's going to happen...
"Time to lay a slam down tonight."
>....did I really-....what.......you may be disappointed in my stupidity and the story stupidity sooner or later this is gonna be sectioned based story and arcs or some crap like that.

1# Wall Crawling Heroes

>>26881436
Don't worry m8, I'm going for a more lulzy angle.
So if everything else gets too edgy you'll still have me.

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>>26880839
>The fireman nods.
>“I’m sorry, kid, but we can’t go up there without a near-certain chance of us gettin’ killed..”
“I see…”
>You push him out of your way and dart straight to the building of fire.
>Three firemen go after you, but your too fast.
>Once you enter the building, you’re skin is hot and the walls are burning.
>Your ears ache of the fire alarm is blaring, and the white light it constantly flashes disorients you as much as the smoke.
>Parts of the hallway are being cooked, and the wires from the walls blowing out into sparks that singe your arm.
>This is a nasty fire…
>The look for any signs that tell where the stairs are.
>They’re all burnt off.
>You wipe the sweat off your brow and hope to spot it soon enough.
>You run to the left of the hall, opening whatever doors you can.
>Finally, you find the stairs, but the higher up it goes, the more smoke there is.
>Do you even remember what floor the girl was on?
>You’re guessing it’s the fourth floor if your memory serves right...but you don’t really know.
>You run up the nearly destroyed stairs.
>First floor…
>Second floor…
>Third floor…
>Fourth floor!
>You hope to god this is it.
>The hallway is dangerously narrow, and flaming pieces of wood and other debris that have fallen from either a light explosion block your path to the long passageway of the apartment rooms’ doors.
>You decide to yell if anyone is still there.
“HEY! LITTLE GIRL ARE YOU OK!?”
>“HEEEELP!!!”
>Good.
>Your voice just barely covers the fire alarm, but you doubt you’ll be able to yell again.
>The smoke you inhaled before was already making you dizzy, but you just yelled at the top of your lungs, breathing in a large amount of smoke.
>You begin coughing with teary-eyes.
>Fuck!
>You can’t see!
>The more you cough, the more smoke enters your body, and the more it enters your body, the more you cough.

>>26881436
I won't be in dark humour instead I'm more so that stupid writer learning and make you all cringe or somehow laugh I don't think I can do dark emotions or edgy kind of stuff so good I guess?

>>26881436

Well, I might go grimderp in my story too, but only with Spider Sonata, and maybe a bit more once she dons the symbiote.

Thankfully, I have an answer to that in the form of Sunset's one year in Japan...

>>26881911
>but your too fast.
:^)

>>26882111
CHANGE LEOPARDON!

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>>26881911

>1911
>Anon saves the day, John Moses Browning confirms it.

>>26882212
...motherfucker that took me a minute, jesus christ the nostalga

>>26881911
>green hill song starts playing

>>26882658

Gotta go fast or DIE!

>>26881911
Tfw anon becomes the smoke monster from lost.

>>26879230

>Be Anna
>Spider-Bitch here is putting up a good fight against you right now
>The pure fact that this is happening right now is rustling your jimmies
>Time to end this
>You convert your arm muscles into string and "contract" them before doing a hard swing, hitting all three balls with your left nunchuck in a horizontal pattern
>Shimmer reacts to the incoming projectiles by holding up her nunchuck, deflecting them
>Into the ceiling, right above the table's net
>Three bangs are heard as you see the balls just rest in the craters created by them
>They're not coming down, aren't they?
>Fuck

>>26882866

"Uhh, draw?"
>"Of course you would say that, String Bean."
"Well excuuuuse me, princess, but you're the one that hit them up there!"
>That shut her up good
>You both stood there for a while, the tension spreading throughout the room
>*snrk*
>Out of nowhere, Sunset began giggling and went into a laughing fit
>For some reason, you joined in on laughing with her
>The rest of the party just stare at the two of you, unable to make out what's so funny
>You didn't care, and you laughed with Sunset for a straight minute before dying down
*phew* "Ooh, that was good."
>"Yeah, I had fun."
>She holds up a fist, and you bump back
>If there were any strains between the two of you, you're sure that they're gone now
"Alright, and that, ladies and gentlemen, concludes my trick."
>The party bursts into cheers as you break into a toothy smile with Shimmer

>>26882880

Ok, now I've cleared up any rivalry between the two. Question is, how would the story continue next? Incorporate more characters, have more action scenes between the two, or get some hot lesbian development?

>>26882936
Yes

>>26882936
yes

>>26882936
Error: Writefag asked a question requiring more than one syllable
Alternative Found: Yes

>>26882936
I agree with the gentlemen above men.

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>>26882960
>>26883001
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>>26883368
>meanwhile

Well, I just had a panic attack and collapsed on my bed because I have to eat lunch with family tomorrow.

Now I've woken up, and I'm ready to get back to reviewing.

I think I'll finally be able to finish my analysis of Rainbow Rocks tonight, and I mean for REALZIES.

>>26883508
>"Do you thinklove can bloomeven on abattlefield?"

>>26883666
Take your time demon Beans.

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>>26883684
I AM TIME

>>26883666
Satan confirms that beans liked the movie

>>26883717
DAMN IT BEANS
DID YOU BECOME A CONCEPT AGAIN?!

>>26883735
I never said that. Like, at all.

>>26883737
IT IS GLORIOUS

>>26883759
I only hear what I wanna hear

>You are the Kingpin, and you have never been richer in your entire life.
>Who would have known that Shocker getting laid was the best thing that could've happened to you? Sure, his productivity has ground to a halt due to...reasons, but you are making a killing in bets thanks to him.
>With him, it's not a question if he'll pull off a caper, it's "whom" will stop him, "how" he'll be stopped, "where" he was stopped, and "when".
>With such a spread, and such varying girlfriends, the bets are piling up.
>Of course, you're not so foolish as to think someone won't get the right bet eventual, so as a precaution, you've limited how much one can bet at once, just enough that you can make it seem like a hefty amount when it's really just pocket change to you.
>And then there's the betting pool, where the winner receives all the wagered money.
>So far, no one has won it.
>It has grown quite large.
>You've placed a few bets into that yourself, as the cash there has caught your eye.
>Even Mysterio, who is also involved with the Shocker, has gotten in on it.
>Some would question the wisdom of letting one of the "factors" in the bets take part in the bet itself. However, seeing as she's yet managed to satisfy her own conditions for winning the pool, to her own chagrin, no one can really complain.
>As of late, though, Shocker's been silent.
>Normally, you wouldn't do this for one of your henchmen, but seeing as he is a prominent part of your income, it would behoove you to at least look into the matter.
>Now, which should you hire first, some of the eccentric mercenaries, or some private detectives?

>>26883779
Ignoring the world and refusing to accept reality as the way it is will only hamper your route to enlightenment, my friend.

>>26883829
Teach us more Beans. Is the waifu the enlightenment?

>>26883829
What was that? I can't hear you.

>>26883829
Reality is for bellends

>>26883796
Nice to see this idea made into a green. I wonder what would cause Kingpin to lose? A new heroine? Maybe a new villain?

>>26883853
Yes. If you meditate and focus on fulfilling your kharma by spreading the word of friendship, your body and mind will become one with brahman---the magic of friendship--as you die. If you do not, then you will be ressurected and have to strive harder to reach harmony.

Basically yes, it can be argued that since Hinduism is similar to the actual construction of the universe (replacing Brahman with the fabric of the universe) that once we reach the pinnacle of good spiritual health and friendship--our energies.

I could write a whole paper on how you can religiously take the lessons in my little pony and make it like Hinduism if you're serious enough about it. They're a lot of parallels to be made.

>>26883916
What the flipping salmons are you smoking, Beans, and where can I get some?

>>26884003
I don't smoke weed. I prefer to let creativity strike me from within.


I'm so alone.

>>26884031

S'ok, we can be lonely together

Bump

Almost done with the Rainbow Rocks review...like, suuuuper close.

You better believe I got tricks up my sleeve
See me dominate, cause I'm powerful and great
Yeah, yeahhh
Think you got what it takes to go toe to toe?
I got more moves than you'll ever know
I own the stage
I'm all the rage
You're from the past
I'm from the space age

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>>26885034
I liked it, so sue me.

>>26885163
Rainbow Rocks has the best songs.
You're good, son

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Welp...It's finished...If you're autistic enough to read my last one of seven pages, then let's see if you can read 15!

GET READY FOR AN IMAGE DUMP BITCHES.

FUCK YOU SPIDER-BLOKE

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>>26885308
Man this movie was a doozy

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>>26885320
The reason why it took so long for this to be made was because I wrote the first draft on painkillers and forgot about the movie...had to rewatch and rewrite

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>>26885333

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>>26885347
If you have read up to this point, congratulations! There's still more!

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>>26885356
Halfway there.

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>>26885371
Sunset and Twilight are very cute together. I ship it.

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>>26885393
Sunset is very waifu material...would waifu if Twilight had not claimed my heart.

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>>26885404
>Twilight Sparkle and Sunset Shimmer will never eat whip cream with you

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>>26885418
Dazzlings were great singers btw

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>>26885379

>Not even the target audience likes Flash

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>>26885427
The movie should of played more of "Tricks up My Sleeve"

Looked it up on Jewtube and it was pretty good.

>>26885418
>You will never lick whip cream off Twilight's navel and Sunset's tits.

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>>26885450
One more left....

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>>26885462
Last one! After this I'll post some images I took of the film with some jokes in the images.

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>MFW I reread SBR 17 times but I can't continue reading Beans' review after 3 pages due to my short attention span

>>26885489
Whoops, forgot to namefag.
Man, you could've just said, "The movie's K," but it was nice seeing that you put a lot of effort into analyzing it

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>>26885486
This pic I just liked because of hip-related reasons

>>26885486
Hey, I got a shout out, cool
Here's sunset singing let it go
http://youtu.be/7qhsmjeQyyA

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>>26885509
And this pic I like for non hip-related reasons

>>26885525
Things you can expect from friendship games:
>Twilight continuing to upstage sunset
>The catchiest ducking songs known to man
>Anime fight scenes
>More Sunset internal dilemmas
>New characters. New hips.

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>>26885509
But those aren't hips, Beans
If they can't at least crush a watermelon through sheer hip drive, I won't accept it

>>26885555
Quads confirm

>>26885521
That should've been the song she sings when fighting the sirens.

>>26885546
>Twilight upstaging Sunny again
Ugh

>>26885555
I go over this in my review--Adagio and the girls know how to move their hips and sway their body...but Sunset still has better hips.

>>26885576
In the actual rainbow rocks movie, I thought Shine Like Rainbows was the best.
And you?

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>>26885294
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>>26885486
So...who here read it all?

>>26885460
It hurts.

>>26885604
I have no idea...

>>26885620
I read it all.
(After watching friendship games, you will never look at the words Daydream and Midnight the same way ever again)

>>26885604
Gonna voice my opinion here
"Its K"
I mean, it sounded nice, but nothing really stuck with me. Guess Freddy Mercury should've been the replacement for The Dazzlings, cause "Another One Bites the Dust" still plays in my head every time I get bored.

>>26885620
I did.

Wew lad... lotta text, yo.

Now review Friendship Games... when you have the time, that is... maybe, if you want.

>>26885658
Rubber band

>>26885640
Stop giving away potential spoilers or I won't review Friendship Games at all. I have absolutely zero knowledge of any EQG related and that comes to my benefit when reviewing the film--being completely unaware of what I'm expecting.

>>26885658
I like Shimmer's look, but who in the seven heavens is Doc Ock supposed to be?
>Inb4 I get scolded for not knowing a minor character

>>26885679
Expect the unexpected, then expectedly unexpect the expected thing then get unexpectedly expected

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>>26885658
>not drawing the scene from Beans with Doc Octavia

REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

>>26885693
It's Cranky

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>>26885693

>>26885693
>>26885702
Wait, did I just miss a drawfag?

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>>26885733
Fear not, I saved it before he killed himself

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>>26885718
I FUCKING CALLED IT

>>26885733
Yes you did. Shame on your family.

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>>26885371
>gets a brain blast harder than jimmy neutron
Gave me a little giggle m8

>>26885759
Why save garbage?

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>>26885803

>Implying you can draw better
Fucking stop right there, m8. Dare you to pick up a pencil and make something better

>>26885838
I drew that. I looked at it and got second thoughts

>>26885866
I liked it. I think you should try more....we need artist like you on this thread.

>>26885883
Agreed

>>26885702
Draw it yourself

>>26885620
Just finished.

>>26885883
Nah. It might be best he practice elsewhere. This namefag circle jerk will hinder him desu

Whatever happened to Red from the last thread?

>>26885404
>"then Maud comes in and pours crackers onto Boulder the rock...voiced by Dwayne "The Rock" Johnson"

I want this and I want it now

>>26886093
D-did you like it? There were a lot of typos but I worked on it for you, senpai...

3:30 am
I guess I should be asleep right meow.
None of you sluts let it die, k?

Piss

>>26886391
Just read it Beans, and I have to admit that this is the most thorough review of the movie I have seen so far.
I love how you keep on trying to see the symbolism in the moon and the 3 stars refering to Twilight.
I really recommend seeing the shorts that tie in this movie with Frienship Games. Some of them add to the Sunset Shimmer trilogy.
Looking forward to your next reviews and how they will influence your story, that by the way keeps getting better and better.
Cool beans as always!

>>26886391
Ok first I need to say when I was reading your review, I swore that you were Dashiegames from youtube. Didn't help I was watching that as I read your review.
Now for the review, I found it to be good and funny. I never saw the movie but I feel you made the review a lot more enjoyable than the movie itself. And hope you do the next movie and/or the shorts like >>26887446 said.

>>26880098
Your sentences are weird man

>>26887702
That's just how I am apparently all sorts of strange.

>>26887906
you've written too little for me to claim your story is engaging
you shouldn't use real names when in costume tho...

>That's just how I am apparently all sorts of strange.
Imma spare your feelings then

>>26887974
Thank you then I'll get to work some time soon I'm just under the weather.

>>26888081
please continue, i like to see more twi

>>26888148
[Not any Twi
Big Time Spider Women Twi!]

[Also featuring anon]

"Hey why don't I get praised!?"

[Anon you will never be as cool.]

"WHAT!? I'm Spider Man NOIR!"

[....]

"Screw everyone!"

>>26888184
there is an anon in almost every green, there is not a twi in everyone

>>26886168
He'll be back soon enough

>>26888190
"But not everyone anon can beat people up from the shadows and be a crawler!
[Twi is still better as the hero personally]
".....Can I not prove anything!?"
[And so Anon still sucks]

>I'm swinging at full force it never gets old web to one building and another crawl on a build once and a while web swing again I FEEL THE ADRENALINE!
>Aside from a surge of excitement it was time to get to business you aren't up to date with the madness that's happening currently in the city. To get you you up to date currently some shady criminal activity apparently is stiring up from what I got out of some thugs stuff about gang wars building up.....golly ain't that just nice great way to star and we already know innocents are caught in the middle of it but don't worry I think I got this under control I've have experience with beating of large groups of people and sabatoge that's good enough right? And with Twi being brighter of the two of us she only makes the Jon more easier and fun I love creaking down on criminal cases....unless twilight decides to brute force the whole operation....her powers can get through her head yikes.
>Anyway it's suppose to be a full on mobster battle and turf takeover but those two things gave me a lead which is are first destination readers.

>>26888510
okay, uhh...

>>26887906
>That's just how I am apparently all sorts of strange.
you may want to change who you are

>>26888640
To late for that I'm stuck with this curse...

>>26888659
sorry, but it's really hard to read

try this
hemingwayapp.com

>>26888679
Could have gave me this earlier. Thanks Anon your making this easier and better for my random writing I hope.

>>26888726
next you just have to learn english tenses, how and when to use them

>>26888881
And so the journey of insanity begins. For my cringe writing!

>>26887446
I think I'm going to watch the shorts for Rainbow Rocks before I move on to "Equestria Girls: Friendship Games" and it's own shorts. I'm also glad somebody appreciates me seeking the symbolism in what these movies have to offer--be it by writers or animators, a good artist always knows how and when to use symbolism. As a writer myself, I always try to see symbolism and catch themes in the story, and seeing you acknowledge this made me smile.

>>26887657
I can't believe I'm actually saying this but I recommend anyone who is a fan of "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic" to give "Equestria Girls: Rainbow Rocks" a watch for it's entertainment value. Unfortunately you might want to watch it's predecessor "Equestria Girls" for a better idea to see how Sunset grows as a character; this is important to the story and it's quality. As for me being this so-called "Dashiegames"...http://vocaroo.com/i/s00N2urss6NF


Anyways, my content/green will be limited today because, as I stated yesterday, I apparently going to have lunch with family at a country club to celebrate Easter. Hooray.

As a form of compensation for my lack of green, have a song I sang once until I get back...http://vocaroo.com/i/s1VATCT1YGnk

I'd sing a song right now, but I just woke the fuck up and my throat is scratchy.

>>26888988
Like I said, I was watching Dashiegames and reading your review at the same time. So the image just came together for some reason.

Hope to see more green of Spider-Shim and another review if possible

>>26888988
Wow Beans, you truly were the My Little Pony: Equestria Girls: Rainbow Rocks.
Also, the moon and the three stars have been present since episode one.
The deepest lore.

>"Wow Beans, you truly were the My Little Pony: Equestria Girls: Rainbow Rocks."
I was what?

>"Also, the moon and the three stars have been present since episode one."
But it's the emphasis in the first film that starts out by opening with it, then closing with it. Those pictures you see at the beginning then at the end are what they want you to remember.

>>26889083
meant for >>26889050

Beans is my waifu

>>26889083
>Those pictures you see at the beginning then at the end are what they want you to remember.
Boy, you are going to have a blast with the next movie.

>>26885620
read it

>>26889277
We'll see I guess....

>>26889415
What'd ya think?

>>26889119
At least you're not my real life stalker

What are you guys doing on this fine Sunday.

>>26889468
Considering that a review is meant to mainly decide if a movie is worth watching or not. It certainly does the job. In which, If I somehow get my hands on it, I'd watch it. So, good job.

Also, twi is best waifu

I remember when i watched Eq girls first.
Watched all 3 of them back to back while on shrooms.

>>26890057
what a waste of shrooms

there should be a pastebin guide for all the greens happening here

>>26890057
Lol, sick af bro, all the uplikes

Back again
Tonight's issue won't be very action packed
A bit of a cool down for our heroine

>You are Sunset Shimmer
>And that's all you are
>For now
>After last night you've decided that you won't be patrolling today
>Today you'll spend your time relaxing and doing some chores
>To get your mind off things
>Good thing it's a Saturday
>You open your eyes and you are imediately met with pains in your back and neck
>Your left arm is completely numb and your knee makes a cracking sound when moved
>The sofa wasn't the best place to sleep
>You slowly crawl out of the sofa
>From each movement you either feel the aching of a muscle or the cracking of a joint
>You lurch in the dark room towards the window
>You pull apart the curtains
>The entire room fills with sunlight
>It's a beautiful day
>You actually feel a smile creep up on your face
>It's been a long time
>Today will be a good day

>>26890474
>After a bit of exercise to loosen yourself you decide to pull the couch back in the living room
>You unstuck the door from it and carry it back where it belongs
>Saddly, the entire couch is covered in tears and splinters
>You think for a bit and decide to cover the couch with a blanket
>No one will notice
>It's also cozier for the coming winter days
>You head back to the kitchen door
>What's left of it
>You get a screw driver and unscrew the handle and the hinges from the door and wall
>You pick up the pieces and leave them next to the fire wood
>You don't hear a valid argument for there to be a door there so you decide to leave the kitchen as it is for now
>You clean up what reamins of the television set
>You throw it out in the garbage
>You arrange some of your books and ornaments you have around to fill in the TV void

>>26890525
>You take the laundry basket and go downstairs
>You start loading up the washing machine
>You turn it on and go upstairs
>You open the fridge door
>Half a carton of milk
>Almost chewable
>A moldy orange
>Bologna
>3 dead wasps
>It's sufficiently depressing
>You grab the bologna
>You go to your room
>You slowly open the door and throw the bait in
>It's instantly ravaged by rabid raccoons
>While you can still see them, you tie them up all together into a small ball of web
>You take the raccoonball outside and leave it there
>They should chew through it in about ten minutes

>>26890595
>You grab yourself a broom and dustpan and you head into your room
>You start cleaning up all the feces
>They are everywhere
>Under the bed
>On the shelves
>In the corners
>On the bed
>In your drawers
>After you cleaned them all up, you take your sheets and all the clothes that were in your drawers and take it downstairs again
>The first batch of laundry is done
>You unload it and load the second
>You take the laundry outside and start putting them on the clothes line
>At the bottom basin you leave your spider mask and sweatshirt
>You take them into the house
>You spread them over the heater so they can dry in secret
>You take care of the second batch of laundry and you can finally sit down

>>26890633
>It felt good to get everything done like that
>But now what?
>You've done all that you have to do
>You look at the clock
>It's barely ten
>Maybe it's time for a little relaxation
>Just as you were about to lay on the couch, your stomach grumbles
>You get up and go to your room
>You open a tin box on your desk and grab some cash from it
>You grab your keys and go to the bus stop

>>26890728
>You are browsing the aisles, looking for the best bargains you can find
>Money tends to be a bit of an issue these days so you prefer to stock up on cheap goods and spend what you have on whatever you like
>The problem is that the food goes bad before you get the chance to eat it and most of the time you have to throw out more than half of what you've bought
>You haven't figured out how to balance buying in bulk and using everything bought to it's maximum potential
>But you'll manage it
>As you walk through the market you see a familiar figure
>You aren't quite sure
>You think you've seen him around school from time to time
>Average hight
>Green skin
>Always wears a suit
>You could go and talk to him
>But he looks pretty busy
>Buying pumpkins
>A lot of pumpkins
>
>Weird
>You can just ignore him and go on your way
>But you haven't talked to anybody in so much time
>When you got your powers you immediately cut off all communications with your friends
>You devoted your spare time to mastering your powers
>Taking some martial art classes
>You can't just jump into being a hero
>You have to train so you won't get caught off guard
>3 months of sparing, wallcrawling, jumping and solitude
> (all for 3 days of botches)
>You shake your head
>You decide it's time to reconnect with the human world
>You walk up to your fellow students
>What was his name again?

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>>26890739
Anon as the Green Goblin.
You cheeky bastard.

>>26890801
Or maybe he's just getting into the Halloween spirit

>>26890739
"Hi, Anon!"
>He jumps
>Looks like you startled him
>He regains his composure
>"Hello, Sunset"
>He has a meek voice
>You haven't really talked to him before
>You've just seen him around
>A bit of a loner
"So, what are you up to?"
>"Nothing, just...preparing myself for Halloween"
>Halloween?
>You have completely lost track of time in any shape or form
>You even forgot Halloween existed
>The town is surprisingly barren on decorations though
"I see...I'm buying groceries"
>You make a gesture to your shopping cart
>Filled to the brim with rice, potatoes, vegetables and meat
>Anon looks surprised by your purchases, but doesn't judge
>He just nods
>He isn't very talkative
>That doesn't matter
>You are in desperate need of company and he is around
"So, are you free later today?"
>"I...um...yeah. I'm free"
"Would you like to hang out? Get a coffee or something?"
>He chokes a bit
>On what he chokes is beyond you
>"Coffee...yeah! Sure! Of course!"
"Great! 2 o'clock at "The coffee pot?""
>"OK! I'd like that!"
>You giggle a bit
>His nervousness gives him an endearing quality
"Alright. See you there"
>"Y-you too!"
>What?

>>26890879
>After organizing your refrigerator, taking care of the laundry, eating some fried rice and reading a book, you go to "The coffee pot"
>Some days aren't as interesting and, strangely enough, pass by quickly
>You sit a table for 2 next to a window and order 2 menus
>In about 5 minutes Anon arrives
>You wave to him and pass him the menu
>"I wasn't late, was I?"
"No, don't worry."
>You open up the menu
>Coffee of all shapes, sizes and temperatures
>Different breeds, creeds and fees
>The waitress comes over
>Anon puts down his menu
>"I'd like a double espresso, with cream, extra sugar, hazel nut and cinnamon. A bit of caramel cream and cocoa"
>In moments like these you realize how out of touch you are with the coffee world
>You just know two kinds of coffee
>Regular with sugar
>Regular without sugar
"Um...I'll have a regular coffee...with sugar"
>The waitress chuckles underneath her nose and walks off
>You've never felt so dishonoured over coffee before
>You yearn to web her feet together as she's walking
>You turn to Anon, trying not to think about the waitress
"So, what's up?"
>"Nothing much... I'll be setting up my Halloween decorations soon."
"That's cool. Are you going for a theme?"
>"Yeah...um...Beasts of legend"
"Beasts of legend?"
>"Yes. I'll be using monsters from folktales. Something more traditional. Less cliche than the haunted mansion"
"Sounds great."
>"Mhm"
>
>
>
>This conversation is going nowhere

>>26890944
>The coffee arrives
>You get a standard coffee cup with a liquid as black as coal and 3 sugar packets
>Anon gets, what you can describe as, a soup bowl with coffee
>Cream as thick as a cloud with a sun drawn on top of it with caramel
>As she walks off, she leaves the bill
>Your coffee is 20 cents cheaper
>Great
>You tear open your packets and pour them in
>You take a sip
>Tastes like puddle water
>Go to bar and take a few more packets
>10 should do the trick
>You walk back and start pouring them
>Anon just watches
>"Hey...umm...have a little coffee with your sugar"
>You giggle
>Very corny, but it caught you off guard
"At least I don't need a spoon to drink mine"
>Anon laughs
>He has a very peculiar laugh
>It cracks a lot and he oinks at the end
>You laugh with him
>This is how friendships get started

>>26891022
>After a few more coffee based jokes you start hitting it off
>Turns out you have a lot of stuff in common
>You both like cheesy 80's synthpop
>You are both into black and white silent comedies
>You can't remember when was the last time you mentioned your totem carving hobby to someone without them laughing
>You haven't felt this happy in quite some time
"I can't believe that we haven't talked to each other before!"
>"Yeah, well you know how it is. I'm a loser and you are one of the popular kids. It would be weird, I guess."
"That's a lot of bull. Besides...recently I haven't been very popular."
>You take a sip from your coffee
"I haven't seen my friends in a few months. I've been busy and I just couldn't make time...too much stuff going on."
>Anon takes a sip from his coffee
>His cheery tone mellows down
>"At least you have friends."
>Ow
>This took a sudden turn
>"I haven't had any friends since middle school. No one really wants to hang out with me."
>He doesn't look up
>He just stares at his cup
>"I hate school. I could bare to be alone, but the worst part is the jocks. Everyday the bully me, call me names."
>You are not sure what exactly to do
>You remain silent, hoping that it's the best action
>"Home isn't anything to brag about either. I live with my dad and he's always at work. I barely see him. He just leaves me my allowance on the table every day before he goes."
>You decide to do something
>You extend his hand and grab his
>He looks at you with a bit of confusion
"It's ok, Anon. It will all pass. It already is passing. You have a friend now."
>He doesn't answer
>He just smiles
>It's the purest smile you have ever seen
>You decide to change the subject on something a bit lighter
>You continue to talk about your favorite movies and quoting scenes
>How one quotes something out of a silent pictures, you are not sure
>But it didn't stop either of you from trying

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>>26891258
I like this. Keep writing.

>>26889922
Nice taste on waifu, and thanks for the compliments, lad. It's hard for me to determine the quality of my own writing.

>>26891258
You're a good writefag. Please me with your words, Red.

>>26891258
>After you had your coffee and payed the bill, you decide to keep Anon company while he waits for his bus
>While talking about the newest totem you are working on, you notice that Anon had a look of concern
>You decide to ask him if there is something wrong
>"Well...ummm...will you be going to the masked ball at school?"
>There'll be a masked ball?
>You haven't been paying much attention in school for some time now
>Your grades show it
>You can't go to the ball
>There are no nights for you to rest
>Just this one
"No, I...have to help my aunt. She's moving to the next town over and I have to help her pack"
>"Ah...o-ok"
>For a moment there, he seemed relieved
>Wait
>Did he want to invite you to the ball?
"Why do you ask?"
>"Huh? Oh...um...no reason...I wasn't going too and...I thought you might want to watch a movie...or something. But since you are busy, we could do it some other time"
>You smile gently
"Yeah. Some other time."
>His bus arrives
>You say your goodbyes and you head home

>>26891679
>You got home at nightfall
>You don't really want to just lay around the house
>But you don't really want to go out
>The best solution is to go on the roof
>You grab your carving knife and small box
>You go on the second floor and climb out of the window
>You decide that tonight is the best time to finish your totem
>You open the box and take it out
>It's almost ready
>It just needs a little bit more
>You start carving it while replaying your day in your head
>You haven't had such a nice day in so much time
>Even before your three day "heroic" streak
>But if YOU think it was nice, God knows how it was for Anon
>It's sad to see such a nice young man be down on his luck so much
>But you did cheer him up
>Looks like heroes don't always have to battle the forces of evil
>Sometime it's just enough to be around and lend a shoulder
>It's actually been the first time you felt like you did something good
>
>You finished the totem
>It's a small figure of a spider
>Originally you chose it for the obvious superficial reasons, without paying much mind to the symbolism of it
>But now you see it more clearly
>As a spider weaves it's web, so does a person weave their destiny through their choices
>You could have chosen to go on patrol tonight, but you didn't
>Today you could have passed by Anon at the supermarket, but you didn't
>You decided to just say hi and see where it will take you
>You believe you've made a right choice today
>You inspect the spider one last time
>It complete
>You take out the tobacco box
>The letters "TK" are engraved on it
>You open it and put the spider in it
>You go inside and close the window

You guys need pastebins

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>>26891691
bruh
2deep

>>26891451
>>26891736
I'm glad you are enjoying my little green
Frankly i haven't had so much fun writing a greentext in a very long time

>>26891692
thats a good idea actually
we should put the pastebins on top of each new thread

heres mine if everyone else is game
http://pastebin.com/hTFVft7x

>>26891832
I've been posting my pastebin, but posting it again won't hurt I guess. Your move other writefags.

>http://pastebin.com/yNaJFuz0

>>26891832
>>26891881
Pastebin here
http://pastebin.com/xkSzdr5V

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>>26881911
>Yet despite how harshly you cough, you’re just as harsh about giving up a little girl’s life.
>You kick the debris out of your way despite barely finding the strength.
>The doors!
>You follow the sound of the screams from the little girl as the flaming walls singe your clothes and parts of your hair.
>The heat is so intense that it burns your skin, but you’re so close to saving her!
>At this point, you hear the screaming of a little girl behind one of the doors.
>Door number 195.
>Like your locker number…
>You try to attempt another scream to let the girl know you’re there.
“HEY! HEY I’M COMING!!!”
>Bad idea...you’re coughing so hard you’re about to puke.
>You gather as much saliva as you can spit the smoke out of your mouth.
>It works only a little.
>You slam your shoulder into the door to break it open.
>You scream in pain as it fails immensely.
>The scream only cause even MORE smoke into your body.
>You’re eyes are streaming with tears so much that the world is just a weird blur of fire.
>You try to study the handle of the door.
>You kick besides the locked handle instead.
>This brings the door down with more success.
>Once you enter the room, you see the girl by the window, shrieking madly.
>Well, not really see the girl, you THINK you see the girl.
>You can hardly SEE anything at the moment.
>You’re coughing and the bright fires make sure to help ruin your sight, and the smoke not only clouds much of your view, but also makes you choke.
>For a brief moment though, the smoke clears and you see the shape of the girl...
>She looks familiar...
“Sunset...?
>She’s engulfed in smoke again and you charge to the direction you saw her.
>It’s not Sunset.
>...
>The smoke clears again and this time your mind does not deceive you.
>It’s a six year-old girl, and her face is smeared in black from the smoke.
>She cries by the window for help until she sees you.

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>>26892346
>You nod and leaning out of the window as well and look desperately for a fire escape…
>There isn’t one…

>Despite the fact you're 30 meters up the building, there is no fire escape at all.
>This place will be getting some lawsuits, that’s for sure.
>The stairs which you came up from are your only option.
>You scoop up the child and carry her under you so that she is shielded by your body.
>You escape the room just in time as it collapses.
>That was close…
>You run to the staircase once again--it’s fallen apart.
>You’re stuck up here!
>You’re not dumb enough to take the elevator either, so there’s nowhere to go.
>You run around the hall trying to avoid the flames from the walls and find an escape route.
>No luck.
>You stand, holding the girl.
>The tears from the smoke are replaced with ones of guilt.
“I’m sorry…”
>The girl cries as she nuzzles into your chest.
>For a minute, you just accept your fate.
>Man, think of all the things you could’ve done.
>One day you could’ve wrote that book about Dad, maybe visit Russia…
>...or you could’ve made amends with Sunset.

>>26892346
>>26892384
Now ladies and gents, what do you think the fire represents?

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>>26892384
>...or you could’ve made amends with Sunset.
oh...

>>26892423
>It's like a English lecture
I have no idea, but you're teasing every reader here, and I'm dying.

>>26892445
>"I have no idea, but you're teasing every reader here, and I'm dying."
No, Anon and the little girl are dying. You're fine.

Is the metaphor not obvious?

>>26892423
fire in the story or fire in the picture?

>>26892423
Anon's burning desire to be like Spider-Woman?
To be a hero
The smoke represents his inability to conquer himself and the status given to him by society
The little girl represents his will to power?

Will Anon turn out to be like Peter Parker in Spider-Gwen?

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>>26892384
>Right when you’re about to go down the first flight of stairs, part of the ceiling hits your back, tumbling you down the flaming stairs.
>The girl is protected as you use yourself as a body shield, but you’re injured BADLY.
>You scream in agony, but smoke starts to pool within your lungs.
>Your eyes are watering, you can’t see anything, yet you hold the girl.
>...You stand up, but end up shouting from the pain.
>Again, more smoke.
>You can’t breath…
>This is the end, isn’t it?
>The last moments of your life.
>You crouch over the child as you curl up around her.
>You’re at least gonna give this child a chance to live.
>You’re so sorry, Sunny.
>So, so sorry…
>You just wanted to be closer, but you just ruined everything because of it
>You never thought you'd feel so cold and empty while dying in a burning building...
>...
>A song plays in your head as you think of her.
>The one you played before taking her to the cafe.
>"She's Always a Woman to Me"
>...She was always a woman to you.
>Sunset, you mean.
>Man.
>You're sorry Sunset.
>And you'll never have any idea.
>You wait patiently for your demise.
>....
>The pull of something from behind you startles you and the child.
>It’s web!
>She came!
>Spider-Woman yanks her web back and reels you in.
>“Follow me!” she shouts urgently
>There’s no humor in her voice unlike your last encounter with her.
>She drags you and the child to a room and, with her shoulder, breaks down the locked door effortlessly.
>She points to a window.
>“That’s gonna be our way out! Just hang on to me, ok?”
>You and the girl nod while coughing.
>You both cling to her for dear life.
>She then jumps out of the open window and shoots a long rope of web from the top of the building.
>Like a bungee-rope, it take you down to the ground safely…
>When your clammy skin meets the cold air of the night and you experience the clean air, you start to shiver in a cold sweat.
>So does the little girl.

>>26892484
>Anon's burning desire to be like Spider-Woman?
>To be a hero
>The smoke represents his inability to conquer himself and the status given to him by society
>The little girl represents his will to power?
All this is 100% yes

>Will Anon turn out to be like Peter Parker in Spider-Gwen?
Maybe?


The fire and smoke also represent a factor of Anon's and Sunset's friendship. Anon even sees it at one point (you'll see when. It's obvious). You answered what I was looking for though.

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>>26892547
>You and the her let go of Spidey once safe on the ground.
>A parent immediately picks up the girl in fear of Spider-Woman.
>You just stand in front of her as she looks at you silently.
“Uh...Nice to see you again.”
>She sighs wearily, yet she has this hint of relief and humor added to it’s weariness.
>“Just hug me, will ya?”
>You oblige way too quickly.
>You sling your arms around her and pull her into you, but not too much so that anything’s touching…
>...But she does.
>Before you and her pull back, she whispers something in your ear.
>“Larson Theater. Tomorrow at 8:00 p.m.”
>With that, she shoots her web and sling off.
>What happened next went by like a blur…
>The firemen gave you a mask to breathe oxygen, you were on the news yet AGAIN, and then you went home.
>As of now, you lay on your bed, ruminating what just happened.
>You almost died.
>Again.
>And now you’re having a date with Spider-Woman.
>Well, not a date, but...you know…
>You sigh as you look at your phone.
>...You wanna talk to Sunset.
>Say how sorry you feel, tell her how you miss her--all that jazz.
>You go to your contacts and begin to call.
>Voicemail.
>Dammit.
>You speak anyways.
“Hey, Sunny...I, uh….hey….”
>This is hard.
“....Look, I know I’ve been hard on you and I realize that we might’ve had a big fight, but...I’m sorry. I can’t even begin to tell you how much I;m sorry for yelling at you, being all up in your face like that…”
>Despite the massive buckets of tears you had from the fire’s smoke earlier, it seems that you still have plenty more to shed.
>God dammit.
>What a fucking night.

>>26892040
adding it to my list

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>>26892638
>Despite the massive buckets of tears you had from the fire’s smoke earlier, it seems that you still have plenty more to shed.
“I was in a fire today and I thought I wouldn’t make it. I-I mean, really thought I wouldn’t make it, even more than when we were at the cafe...I remember seeing your face in the smoke, and when I thought I was going to die--I remember thinking of how much I missed you...Is it strange to say the fire reminded me of you? I mean, not just because of your hair of course, but in like, I dunno, a spiritual way?”
>Man you sound crazy.
“Like, the fire just kept getting brighter and brighter, showing me more things to see, but yet it’s smoke then hides it and made it impossible to reach...But you know that from that smoke is a light that is strange and beautiful as it is dangerous. I feel like I’m an early human discovering fire for the first time with you...and when I’m without you…” you sob “...it’s just so damn cold.”
>You wipe your tears.
“I guess I’ll maybe see you tomorrow. See you later...I hope.”
>You hang up and fall into a deep sleep.

>>26892638
>>26892665
you old bean
you sure know how to tug at my heartstrings

>>26892665
This explains the symbolism of the fire too. It's not only an allegory for Anon's passion of wanting to be the hero, but it's an example of his relationship with Sunset.

The more he sees of her, the more Sunset will try and cover it up. This is metaphorically killing Anon as he keeps trying to dive in to find who Sunset is while not knowing the danger.

>>26892751
I like it
Having a huge ass writer's block right now. Writing interesting characters is hard.

>>26892802
do what i do in these situations
depending on the genre of writing i either watch
>for comedy
black books
>for heavy ass depression
true detective s1

works everytime

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>>26892745
>implying I don't feel bad for my own characters
Being an invested writer hurts. Your characters are a part of you when writing them. I've cried many times for my own characters in stories. They're your children; precious beings you've birthed into a world. Whenever a character is horribly written (like everyone in Equestria Girls), it shows a lack of care for their creation.

>>26892802
>Writing interesting characters is hard.
My advice to making a really interesting character is to make them curious to the reader with a huge load of relatable attributes. Make them people. Make sure the dialogue stands out and is unique from other characters too.

>>26892835
do you write everything a you go or do you have a final goal in mind and try to connect the dots towards it?

>>26888988
Your voice is beautiful, could you sing the spectacular spider man intro for us

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>>26892423
beans I love your shit, but damn I feel dumb when you guys get to talking about literary devices.

>>26893325
Well, think about Symbolism and metaphors and tone.
Not beans

>>26890525
>you
>you
>you
>you
>you
>you

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>>26892908
A bit of both. In my head I have a vision, but I have to improvise my way their.

>>26893325
I'm diagnosed as a dyslexic. Stop doubting yourself and write, my friend.

>>26893357
Everyone should thinks about beans and their benefits to your health. They're just as healthy as your greens, boys and girls!

>>26892910
You flatterer you...http://vocaroo.com/i/s05TygB2ujPF
I'll do more if you want.
Maybe do some Spidey voice over if you really want it.

>>26893678
Beans also boost your stats!

-POW

WHAT!?

>>26893678
I was trying to say I wasn't beans kek

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>>26893720
I know.

>>26893678
Can you sing the song Anon sung to Sunset?

i nominate Beans for the most goat guy on /mlp/

>>26893895
If this guy were to be well known, he'd have to be a real life mary-sue that can not only write but be multi-talented and help people because he's great.

tl;dr
He's not our messiah, but he's close. Maybe if he did charity because it's fun or some other bullshit

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>>26894035
>Maybe if he did charity because it's fun or some other bullshit

About that...

>>26893893
The only song worth singing is this
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dy7J9q-eWmE

>>26894082
you gold hearted devil you

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>>26893678

>http://vocaroo.com/i/s05TygB2ujPF

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>>26893893
Sorry it's not my best.
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0SEi2ePaYVI


Anything else? I can do voice over too...

>>26894356
can you do a dramatic reading of your story?

>>26894373
...Yes. I can. If I do though, it'll be a side project of my green text and will take time like my reviews.

>>26894439
we accept

>>26894458
I'll be getting to work.

>>26894476
godspeed you beautiful man

>>26894356
Im curious to know how it sounds like to hear you sing hallelujah, got the idea because was just watching shrek with my niece

>>26894356
Wait, were you that guy who did that funny mane 6 voice over?

>>26893678
That song sure was spectacular

Alright! This took a bit longer to put together than I was hoping, but expect a continuation to this
>>26857418
In just a little while!

>>26895095
Punisher story? awesome
what did you think of daredevil season 2? I thought Bernthal as Punisher was fucking amazing

>>26895111
I was just about to start watching it. I've heard only good things so far about it though. Unfortunately, I also heard the rest of the season with the Elektra arc was a bit weak, but I'll wait and see

I'm pretty excited to see how it all turned out!

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>>26891451
>It's hard for me to determine the quality of my own writing.
Well, considering that it would be virtually impossible to not shown bias towards yourself, yeah. As they say, "You are your own worst critic"

>>26895151
ah I agree that the Elektra bits were weaker but I didn't hate it personally, the Punisher stuff is fucking great though. Bernthals performance legitimately made me cry at one point and he managed to portray a guy full of rage perfectly. I prefered season 2 almost entirely due to the punisher stuff

>>26895199
That's really cool to hear! I'm pretty excited to see it for myself now.

If it's as good as everyone says, then I'm hoping that means the Punisher might get more attention from Marvel in general now.

>>26895321
I'm still waiting on doctor strange to get in on the marvel movie train.

>>26894746
Yes. It was me.http://vocaroo.com/i/s1BW3yftdioR

>>26894911
That pun was amazing

>>26895321
there is talk about a punisher spin off already

>>26882880

>Be Sunset Shimmer
>Right now, you are staring at a clock, waiting for the seconds to tick by
>God, why is Pre-Cal so boring?
>After what seems like eternity, the bell rings, and you hastily get out of class and out of the school, where you find Annalisse reading one of her Chinese comics on a bench
>After the ping-pong incident, the two of you got together more often
>Surprisingly, having a friend that you can talk with about fighting baddies eases you up more and makes you think less of the impending threats of doom that endangers the city every once in a while
>You showed her a form of psuedo-web-sling she can do using her strings, and she taught you ways you can set up traps using your webbing
>Conversations with her often involved shittalking, and to the regular passerby, you two appear to be in constant feuds
>But the both of you understand that it's just playful banter at the end of it
>After a while, Annalisse had the idea of teaming up
>You two became recognized as a team in the news, "Spider-Woman and The Weaver"
>However, The Daily Bugle still only rips on you in their articles and stories, calling you a menace to the city
>Fuck you J. Jonah
>Fuck you and your nasty Hitler mustache

Alright, here we go!

>>26895393
Shit I'd be down for that.

>>26895415
Oh Hell yeah!

>>26895590

>You walk up to her, and she notices you without even looking up, at least, you think. Those huge glasses have to be obstructing her line of sight
>"You look like a grump. What happened?"
"Nothing, it's just classes killing me, again."
>"I really don't get how you're failing basic classes."
"Well, not everyone has an immense brain capacity like you."
>"Twilight does, though."
"Do you want me to be like Twilight?"
>"Point taken. Wanna go to the cafe?"
"Alright, I'll pay for everything."
>"You better, can't drive or learn for shit. Is swinging around the only thing you're good at?"
>Oooh you're gonna get her back for that
>And you know just how to rustle her jimmies
>No homo
"Fuck off, just put away your cartoons and let's get going."
>A look of distaste spreads across her face
>She silently gets up, picks up her bag, and walks up to your face
>"The. Term. Is. Manga. You pleb."
"Alright, alright. Mang-uh. There, you happy? Now let's go, I don't want to waste time here arguing with you."
>She chuckles, "Kay, but I'm gonna be carving a huge chunk outta your wallet, got that?"

>>26895596
Oops

Actually, I'll wait until Super Famanon's finished first

>>26895658

It's K
I'm still being affected by writer's block, so I'm just putting up a bit of what I wrote down. Go ahead.

>>26895411
The Sweetie Belle part gets me every time.

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>>26895676
Well alright then, cool!

>Wrenching the front gate open, you stare inside the warehouse of 612 Wharf Avenue
>Before you stands several mountains of wooden crates stacked on top of one another in a vast and dimly lit room
>You could neither see nor hear any sign of the man you’ve been hunting, though you felt that he had to be near
>Gripping your M60 Machine Gun tightly, you marched forward into the scumbag’s hideout and steeled yourself for what would come
>Micro’s voice calmly pipes up over your earbud
>”Whatever happens, don’t get too close. He can tear you in half.”
>You quietly grunt in confirmation, careful not to speak up lest you announce your presence
>Yet despite your caution, it quickly becomes clear that he already knows you’re here
>”SHEEEEEEEIT!”
>You come to an abrupt halt as your target’s laughter begins to echo throughout the warehouse
>”Ain’t you a sight for sore eyes? Didn’t think I’d ever get to beat yo ass again.”
>His booming voice echoes around as he talks down to you in that haughty tone of his
>Micro can evidently hear it too
>”Did you find him?”
“No, but he’s around here somewhere.”
>You scan the warehouse closely as his boisterous laughter resounds
>”That’s good though, cause I want to be the one who puts you down, Little Man.”
>Your scowl intensifies as you attempt to find him
>You couldn’t let him get away
>This guy was ex-military, like you, but the nature of his service was so classified that not even Micro was able to find out exactly who he was or what he did
>What you did know was that he had a rap sheet over a mile wide, also like you, and if you let him go it was just going to get longer
>At least you had enough time to—
>”Anon! I got bad news.”
>Wonderful
“What now Micro?”

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>>26895722
>”Someone just put an APB out for you. There’s going to be police swarming all over this neighborhood in a few minutes.”
“Shit.”
>Could have been that lady who was with the punk you killed earlier, or someone might have spotted and recognized The Van
>Either way, this meant you had to finish things here and now
“I’m done fucking around.”
>”Me too!”
>Twirling about, you spotted your target standing tall up on a rusty catwalk
>A giant of a man with pale white skin, massive muscles, and an enthusiastically crazed look in his red eyes, your target should have been an easy man to find
>But you soon learned that nothing was too easy when you were dealing with
>”Bulk ‘Barracuda’ Biceps. BLAST HIM!”
>You raised up and braced your M60 just as he lowered his arms and aimed his own weapon at you
>That freak was wielding a .50 cal Machine Gun
>”Come git some! YEAH!!!!!”
>You and Barracuda fire upon each other as you break out into a run down the warehouse
>Deafening gunfire fills the entire building as two chaotic storms of bullets rage against each other
>Wooden crates all around you explode into clouds of splinters and nails as you struggle to find cover while returning fire
>The light from his gun illuminates his manic grin
>You manage to wipe that smile right off his face
>Barracuda recoils as you spray the catwalk he stands on
>”Aw SHIT!”
>The catwalk gives way and sends him plummeting down
>His body crashes to the floor, smashing through several crates and sending boards of woods flying

>>26895758
>With his barrage of bullets halted, you spring out of cover and aim into the mountain of boxes
>You give him everything you got and unleash the entire magazine
>Your gun roars as you glare into the cloud of smoke and dust growing before you until you’re finally out of bullets
>”I think… I think I could hear that all the way from here. Tell me you got him.”
>Dropping the spent machine gun, you pull out your service pistol and approach the slowly dissipating fog of war
“Let’s find out.”
>Holding the gun forward with both hands, you prepare to finish Bulk off once and for all
>Stepping over fragments of wood, you stare forward into the hazy mess and—
>A huge hand reaches forward from your side and smacks the gun out of your hand
>Glancing up, you see a bloodied Barracuda glowering down at you
>”Now you fucked up.”
>Your eyes widen as Barracuda’s fist zooms through the air and smashes into your cheek
>You feel like you just got hit by a freight train as you stumble back
>Then, before you can even register the pain, you feel your breathe knocked right out of you as his fist collides with your gut
“OOF!”
>”ANON!”
>Micro’s cry shocks you almost as much as the sudden gut wrenching pain does, jolting your senses as you stumble away from Barracuda
>You watch him slowly approach you from the corner of your eye as you fight to remain on your feet
>”Come on sucka! Can’t you fight back?!”
>Staggering over to the other mountain of crates, you manage to stay on your feet by supporting yourself up with a box
>As you slowly catch your breathe, you catch sight of something heavy and rusty lying on top of the crate
>”Man, this is sad. You just gonna—“
>Grabbing the crowbar, you twist around and chuck it right for his head
>Barracuda raises his arms at the last moment, blocking the crowbar
>That’s when you rush in
“You just going to keep talking?”
>You slam your fist straight into his gut
>”f-FUCK!”

>>26895790
>You immediately follow up your first punch with another, and another
>Then just as he’s falling back, you reach up and take a swing right at his face
>Only for him to catch your fist
>”You punch like a bitch!”
>As you try to wrench your hand free, his other hand swipes forward
“URK!”
>You cough out as he grasps you by the throat and raises you up off the ground
>”And now you gonna die like a bitch!”
>This guy
>He could take just about anything you threw at him and still come back for more
>You couldn’t give up, you had to give more
>Couldn’t give up
>Can’t give up
>Won’t…
>…
>Micro’s voice echoes once more into your head
>'Whatever happens, don’t get too close. He can tear you in half.’
>Heh
>She’s going to be pretty pissed once you get back
>Your eyes narrow as you glare back at him
>Tearing your hands away from him, you reach down to your belt
>In one fluid motion, you brandish your combat knife and jam it through his forearm
>The pressure on your throat relaxes as Bulk’s eyes go wide
>Raising your legs up, you kick him in the chest and fall out of his grasp, leaving the knife in his arm as he stumbles back in shock
>”Ah… aw fuck. FUUUUUUUUUU—“
>Gasping for air, you crawl away from him as he bellows in agony
>You attempt to rise back onto your feet only to trip over yourself and land on your knees
>Barracuda on the other hand seems to have forgotten about you, momentarily blinded by the pain as he clenches his stabbed arm
>Trying as hard as you can to find something, anything to defend yourself with, you just barely register what happens next
>”You idiot, hold on!"

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>>26895834
>With a thunderous crash, The Van bursts through the warehouse wall
>Micro, via the remote control support she had installed, rams the hulking vehicle through several mounds of debris as it’s headlights pass over you and fall over your opponent
>Barracuda ceases his cussing and looks up just in time to see The Van coming right for him
>He hops up as The Van barrels into him, his body crashing against and fragmenting the windshield
>Bringing her vehicle to a sudden stop, Micro flings Barracuda off of the hood of the Van
>He hits the ground hard and rolls over several yards before pushing himself back onto his feet
>”MUTHAFUCKA!!!”
>Reaching behind his back, he brandishes two massive handguns and opens fire on The Van, likely not realizing or just not caring that no one is really behind the wheel
>You watch most of the bullets ricochet off of it as you finally stand back on your own two feet
>Exhaling a tired sigh, you speak up at her
“We put a gun on that for a reason.”
>”I’m getting to that!”
>The windshield flips open and from where the passenger seat would be located, a large mini-gun appears
>Barracuda stops shooting and stares at the Van in awe
>”You gotta be shitting me.”
>The gun begins to roar as it whirls about in a circle
>Sprinting off, Micro fires upon him with her roaring minigun
>Huge holes are blasted all over the walls as her weapon traces after Bulk
>Your eyes widen as you watch her fire upon him
>You aren’t about to stop her, but you still can’t help but remember that Micro’s never actually killed anyone before
>You have no time to ponder what this all means before it’s too late

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>>26895857
>The mini gun’s barrage comes to a screeching halt
>”No! NO!”
>You glance back at the smoking machine only for another loud crash to tear your attention back to Barracuda, who has just stampeded through the warehouse’s wall
>”The fucking thing jammed AGAIN!”
“Hang on! I’ll finish this!”
>Sprinting over to The Van, you tear the driver’s seat door open and reach toward the holster strapped behind the seat
>You pull out your Taurus Judge, a revolver so powerful that it fired shotgun shells, and took off after him
>To your great displeasure, you hear police sirens coming in over the distance
>”Fuck it! Get back here Anon, you have to—“
“Not until he’s dead!”
>Rushing outside of the warehouse, you spot Barracuda shambling onto a ladder that stretches down past the wooden pier
>As he slings himself over the ledge, he catches sight of you and freezes
>Sliding to a halt, the two of you stare each other down
>Bloodied, battered, and pissed as all Hell, neither of you are about to back down
>He reaches behind his back as you raise your revolver
>A burst of flame erupts from your gun
>”AARGH!”
>Barracuda falls backwards and off of the pier
>You hear a small crash and a large splash as you rush over
>Looking down, you see two halves of a wooden boat sinking below the water along with a torrent of bubbles rising to the surface
>Taking aim, you fire your hand cannon again and again into the waters below
>”Anon! You have to leave right now! MOVE YOUR ASS!”
>Your gun clicks as you pull the trigger and cycle through the spent cylinder
>You scowl down into the murky waters before reluctantly running back inside
>You toss yourself into The Van as the police sirens intensify
>”Hold on, I’ll get you out of there.”
“I’d rather drive.”
>She ignores you as the engine revs up, the stick shift moves about, and the wheel turns
>A new gaping hole is made as Micro drives you through the warehouse, toward five parked police cars

>>26895886
“Don’t—“
>The car lurches around several of the police cruisers, and smashes on through the front tip of one, as it zooms down the street
>”No backseat driving!”
>Your heart begins to beat a bit more rapidly as you try to make out what is in front of you through the cracked windshield
>You reach up and adjust the rearview mirror, seeing no less than three police cars chase after you
“I should leave The Van behind.”
>”Oh no! We spent too much time and money on this thing, I’m getting you and The Van back here in one piece.”
“You’re getting greedy.”
>”Shut up!”
>The Van swerves off road onto a grassy field filled with junk
>Passing by a burning tire, Micro crashes The Van through a wooden fence and flies you down onto a backroad
>Filled with puddles and potholes, it’s a bumpy ride over this backroad
>When you look back behind you and spot two police cars keeping up the chase, you can see that they’re having even more trouble than you
>Glancing to your sides, you see what appear to be factories lying around you
>”Quick, turn off the headlights!”
>You do as she says and switch off all the lights, engulfing you and The Van in pitch black darkness
>Swerving you off road yet again, she drives you through yet another fence as planks of wood are sent flying
>After driving along in darkness for about a minute, your ride makes a messy landing onto a new road
>Flipping the headlights back on, you see that Micro has driven you all the way to the city limits
>She let’s out a sigh of relief
>”God…”
“Nice work.”
>”Hmph, just nice?”
>You let the car fall silent for a long moment as you wipe the sweat from your brow
“Thank you.”
>Hard to believe she doesn’t have a Driver’s License yet

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>>26895915
>Staring out through the cracked windshield, you fight the urge to doze off as the lights of the city grow brighter
>Eventually Micro brings you back to a familiar looking neighborhood
>When The Van slides to a halt, you glance out and see the abandoned police station
>”Come on down, I’ll take care of The Van.”
>Popping the car door open, you stumble out of the vehicle and slowly make your way up the steps of the abandoned precinct
>This whole night left a very bitter taste in your mouth
>You feel like you made way too many mistakes and came close to death far too many times
>Worst of all, you couldn’t say for certain that Barracuda was dead
>If he managed to escape alive, you were sure he would come back for you
>You could only hope that he came straight your way, and wouldn’t hurt anyone else in the meantime
>While you mull over all this, you walk through the opening foyer of the police station
>This was never a very big or well-funded place, though it suited your purposes very well
>Taking the stairs down into the basement, you march along past empty jail cells before stopping in front of one which is still closed shut
>Pulling out a key, you unlock the door and pull the moth-eaten mattress off of the wall, revealing a tunnel that lead further below
>”OK, the car is hidden now. You almost here?”
“Just a few more minutes.”
>”Good. Hey listen, we need to talk.”
>Ah shit
>Those were words you never in your entire life liked hearing
>Walking a bit longer down the tunnel, you find yourself standing before a metal door
>You unlock this one as well and step inside an abandoned boiler room
>While the machinery that this room was originally built for was long since broken, there was plenty of modern equipment lying around that still worked relatively well
>Various floodlights lit up the room, several power generators rumbled all over the place, a police scanner off to the side sounds off various codes
“Home sweet home."

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>>26895940
>”About time you got here.”
>Off in the corner, a small figure busily types away on a keyboard
>In front of her stands three computer monitors, and strewn on the table around her lies empty ramen noodle cups and energy drink cans
>Standing up out of her cushioned seat, she walks over to you
>”You look like shit."
>The two of you scowled at one another, though you liked to think you looked a bit more intimidating than her
>Your partner was fairly close to you in age, though with her short height and thick rimmed glasses you swore she could pass for a high school student
>She was also easily recognized by her unkempt hair and her rugged black sweater
>Her sweater always looked a little small on her, though that had nothing to do with her weight
>It was just hard to look at her and not notice the huge rack on her chest
>”Well, is he dead?”
“I shot him, and he fell into the bay. I couldn’t confirm the kill.”
>She sighs as she places a finger up to her glasses and readjusts them
>”If that damn gun didn’t jam—“
“You shouldn’t have had to step in like that. You did well Moondancer.”
>Moondancer always insisted that you never call her by her real name over the com channel, but it felt nice to be able to use it when you two were in private
>After all, she was pretty much the only one who still called you ‘Anon’ these days
>Suddenly, her eyes widen as she stares down at the hole in your shirt
>”Have you been shot?”
>You raise up your Skull shirt and reveal the bandage over your gut
“I treated it already, though I guess I better remove the bullet now.”
>Turning away from her, you walk away from her battle station toward the first aid kit on the wall
>”You need help this time?”
“No, I can handle it.”
>”Alright… but when you’re finished we need to talk.”
“About what?”
>You peer over your shoulder back at her, and see a familiar picture of a red and blue spandex wearing heroine
>”Spiderwoman."

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>>26895611

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>>26895973
And that's all for now!

Any thoughts as to how the story is going so far, I'd love to hear it. I'm still kind of figuring out exactly where I want to take the story, but I'm hoping that the introduction I made was at least a fun set up.

Now to go look for a Daredevil steam

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>>26894373
So far this is what I've done. It;s the first part of my green in a dramatic reading.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1mfx6EQ95QG

>>26896087
I like it, but how do you want to write the relationship between Spidey and Anon? Will it just be hate-filled with Anon purely focusing on hunting Spidey, or is there gonna be some interaction with Shimmer as well?