I'm copy-editing/proofreading a tabletop RPG book for a friend, and I'm not sure if a grammar construct he's using is correct.
>This guarantees uniformity in magazines, spare parts, and ammunition, as well as familiarity.
If I remember correctly, each noun in a list like this should have a comma after it, with the article "and" or phrase "as well as" at the end of the list. My current correction reads like this:
>This guarantees uniformity in magazines, spare parts, ammunition, and familiarity.
Is my suggestion correct?
The second is better but you're still leading off with a dummy subject with "this." Maybe use "the mechanic" or "the rule" because RPG players are litigious as fuck and will argue over any ambiguity.
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I'll post the entire paragraph for context.
>Choosing a sidearm can be an arduous choice. There are many things to be considered, such as caliber, capacity, and upgrade points, as well as cost. A good alternative to this to have the GM select a firearm as a standard issue sidearm for the police force. This guarantees uniformity in magazines, spare parts, and ammunition, as well as and familiarity.