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Critique my short short story 2017-07-16 11:16:41 Post No. 9763285
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"Alas," said the mouse, "the world is growing smaller every day. At the beginning it was so big that I was afraid, I kept running and running, and I was glad when at last I saw walls far away to the right and left, but these long walls have narrowed so quickly that I am in the last chamber already, and there in the corner stands the trap that I must run into." "You only need to change your direction," said the cat, and ate it up.
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post it in the crit thread and maybe I will desu
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a little kafkaesque
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can you translate into spanish?
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>>9763290
a lot kafkaesque
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>the story begins with "Alas..."
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Oh oh, critique a quote from mine:
What the... is this heaven?," I asked. "You wish," the Devil laughed in a way that could be described as evil or possibly even demonic or even devilish if one were to look up synonyms. "Not again," my robotic dog sidekick, iBark, said or I guess you say, barked"
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>>9763285
Good work, Franz
Remember to burn it before you die ;)
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