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Not really a sample but would anyone be interested in a novel that explores contemporary political philosophy through dialogue? It also has a plot but it's secondary to losers talking about politics

>>9721419
Sounds interesting but awfully hard to pull off. You would have to provide some legitimate insights to make the book worth reading. I can turn on CNN for "losers talking about politics." You would also have to keep the dialogue well balanced so one point of view doesn't take over the book and turn your story into a masturbatory piece of propaganda which alienates half of your potential readers. The easiest course may be to write it as satire but even so, I think the major challenge is in overcoming our incredibly polarized political world with genuinely unique ideas or new perspectives.

I ve been reading Junkie by Burroughs.

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Bumble buckled knuckles tripped wire crumple,
Strands stranding lack and no disbanding,
Tactile Bumble was frustrated to the grumble,
Camble's cables - entwined and demanding.

The cables interlocked with the legs of tables,
Cuss' sake - what a fuss to make in his wait,
Maybe this year, Bumbles' Christmas is late,
Foresight's take - examine package's labels.

hare krishna went to town for a latke dishna
he ate and ate until he couldn't hare 'nymore
he had a little nap until he was seen by vishna
"mega fat cunt, lad," he walked out the door

now hare hare doesn't eat so much right now
last time the cheeky hare became sacred cow
moral of the story is don't fill up your belly bump
or your fat ass will gain a fatty fat rump

t. spicy meme

I have posted my story here before and got mixed reviews. The main complaints are about my depiction of schizophrenia, which I'm diagnosed with, and that i make interesting subjects boring with my writing style.

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