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Is this good writing? 2017-06-27 12:40:29 Post No. 9687144
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>And who but one--and that one he who, but for those who crowded round him then, had never met a look of kindness, or known a word of pity--could tell what agony of mind, what blighted thoughts, what unavailing sorrow, were involved in that sad parting?
>‘See,’ cried Nicholas eagerly, as he looked from the coach window, ‘they are at the corner of the lane still! And now there’s Kate, poor Kate, whom you said you couldn’t bear to say goodbye to, waving her handkerchief. Don’t go without one gesture of farewell to Kate!’
>‘I cannot make it!’ cried his trembling companion, falling back in his seat and covering his eyes. ‘Do you see her now? Is she there still?’
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Reads like something a Victorian would write if he was paid by the word.
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>>9687144
Eh, not his best, no.
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It's not bad, but it's not particularly good for Dickens, either.
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>>9687144
The characters speak like they're in a play.
The first line took three readings to fully decipher, due to having a clause within a list within a sentence.
>And who but one--and that one he who
This is particularly disruptive and unnatural. Once you remove the interrupting clause:
and that one he who... had never met a look of kindness
Is grammatically incorrect in some way, unless this maze has thrown me off.
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>>9687144
LOL
nah
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