I wrote a long ass poem. What do you think?
Cracks hold our world apart, they open up one eye to creep through silent streets. Slithering like malformed reptiles, devouring shades of white as they spit venom and drink deep of life's water. Feast in solidarity, no sin can wipe the slate clean once the fires die, no liquor strong enough to light them again. Cored embers scatter the seas as Rome burns, such sweet melodies of buried dreams. Pierce through the eye of the sun as wings burn through shattered glass, fill the sky with the cries of rebellion. Shatter against waves of steel, fall upon them and pray. Break from misplaced delusion, it's only a flutter of failed fornication, reaching outwards and upwards through legions of scorched soldiers. Place coins on the eyes of every beggar and king, let wine flow from engorged gullets, tasting the blood of heroes drunk from tin cups, chocking the righteous and igniting the meek. Set fires but never spread, unearthly tainted miasma hangs from every breath, lost hopes clung to like blankets through the long night, makes fools of falsifiers and seeps through skinned teeth. Quench ever deeper, drown in your own arrogance and let not a breath of innocence give you doubt. Creatures we are, to creatures we be, eating the lesser as fears evolve and the mountains rise. Give wake to our own lives, salting flayed skin that hangs to broken frames, painting smiles across spines hung from our halos high. Desperate voices call from deep waters, tendrils of light rise from the depths, strangling nations across crooked timelines, swaying through space on a pendulous weight. Liberate from shielded virtues, spinning vices upon silken thread, laying low the depths of depravity, an unchecked cavity in the maw of the world. Sit still and you'll see.
uh yeah it's pretty good cunt keep it up
>>9669868
Poems are the biggest cancer our civilization still holds onto.
Well, is this particular cancer manageable, or terminal?
>>9669988
I actually kinda like it on the 3rd read. Good job.
Yay!
>>9669976
Poems are only seen as shit because you've been fucked into the capitalistic ideology of speed and efficiency. Why toy with emotions and dance around a meaning with interesting and nostalgic like feeling when you could just equate something to terminal. i.e. cancer. Why walk anywhere and experience the walk when you could just drive and forget the whole thing?
>>9670056
Dude, I'm the author and I think you're a fruit.