The Rape of Maggie Marie

>>9575584
Freckles are a god tier trait

christ, awful and harrowing yet malevolently powerful.

>>9575584
strong five to light six desu

RAPE MAKES MY WILLY HARD
HAHA SEXUALITY HAHA
HAHA

Are there any works of note from the perspective of the Rapist.

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>>9575636
obligatory

>>9575636
I think most writers would be afraid of getting into the mind of a rapist.

Closest thing I've seen is Norm Macdonald's joke about "doing that thing that makes you feel like god" about a murder rape

>>9575584
Trite, simplistic, and puerile.

Don't quit your day job.

>>9575584
My childhood dog's name was Maggie Marie.

>>9575584
Enough of this Young Adult pleb shit.

>>9575636
Well, there are, but they tend to be weird badly-written online erotica and you can very clearly tell that they were written for the personal enjoyment of the writer and not much else.
This might be up your alley: http://jimgoad.net/pdf/violence/rapeworldintro.pdf

>>9575584
The second stanza exposes a real weakness in the writing that makes this superficial shock-poetry boring. If you're gonna try so hard, then at least be interesting

>>9575584
I like it desu good work. Not as edgy as everyone is saying

>>9576433
>whole point is an explicit "raping makes me feel alive
>uses rhyme to the same effect as Plath's Daddy (one of her edgier pieces because of this sarcastic nursery rhyme gait)
>obvious place-holder words in the meter
>not edgy shit

You want good un-apologetic rape? look to Yeats for inspiration

>>9576455
>You want good un-apologetic rape
Honestly yes. It seems like a very underused theme considering how common murder is in lit.
>>9576455
>Yeats for inspiration
Anything specific?

>>9575584

Quite based, could be Slayer lyrics

>>9576482
Leda and the Swan is about the sublimity of being raped by a goose.

>>9576431
OP here

It's not supposed to be shocking. This isnt a "fuck society I'm going to be edgy" poem.

It's just my attempt at trying to get inside the mind if a rapist. My attempt at imagining how thrilling it must feel to a rapist to do what he is doing. Obviously to cross that kind of line, the reward from their experience must be more than just busting a nut.

Ripoff of Denis Johnson's "Carcrash While Hitchiking"

>>9575636
Tao Lin's Richard Yates
Catcher in the Rye

>>9577754

It'd be nice if people read real poetry before attempting poetry desu

>>9575584
Nael, age 6 has gone down a really dark path.

>>9577754
>This isn't a "fuck society I'm going to be edgy" poem.

It's like you actually believe that. KEK!

>>9577778
I dont like most poetry. Its all very generic and overly emotional. Like they are desperately trying to be profound. Theres always some reference about crimson and about emptiness.

I write what I think could be more properly as shitpoetry. Its purely for me, not for others.

>>9578285
>Its all very generic and overly emotional
that's exactly what good poetry avoids
>they are desperately trying to be profound
I prefer ambition to resignation
>always some reference about crimson and about emptiness
have you only read amateur poetry?

Try this one
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/detail/92665

>>9578285
>purely for me, not for others
>proceeds to post poem

Get this degenerate shit of my board you subversive kike

>>9575584
>I pushed further deep inside
>That feeling was oh so fleeting
Awful, the worst lines in the poem.
>further deep
>oh so
You need to change that. It's not good overall, but those lines stick out.
>>9577754
>not edgy
Okay, try writing a new one.

>>9576485
>is about the sublimity of being raped by a goose.
>sublimity

No.

>>9578926
yes

>>9575584
terrible

>>9579201
>projecting

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Why didn't you post it this way? Occidental based people will tend to look at an image from left to right, now if you are trying to instillate this kind of rape aurea I'd suggest you post the photo in a way in which the look of the watcher follows the POV of the raper inconscially.

>>9576391
Post your best rape poem then bruh

Goes the same for any faggot on here. I wrote it in 30 seconds for laughs, but still better than if any of you plebs took an hour to write one with your poverty tier IQ.

>>9579292
nah

>>9579366
BUTTHURT

>>9579366
>wrenches AND slants rhymes in a pile of attempted meter
>spent 30 mins on it
>calls me a poverty-tier IQ

>>9579366
I can feel your frustration.

>>9579719
I dont even know what meter is. I dont care either. If poetry is art, and art is organic, than I wont make it scientific. Labeling everything about art is an attempt at making it rational, which is anti-art.

>>9579856
Nah just saying if it took me 30 secs to come up with something not half bad, guaranteed it would take you fags an hour or more to come with something that is not even a fraction as good as what I did.

My artistic abilities are god tier.

>>9580566
>art (from the same root as artificial) must be organic

Meter isn't anti-art its a fucking technique that allows a consistent rhythm. Techniques are used in every art-form.

>>9575584
Literally nothing of value

>>9575584
When I raped Maggie Marie
*crawling in my skin starts playing*
I watched the blood dancing in her eyes
*sharpens katana*
As I choked her lifeless body
*looks at you under his fedora*
I pushed further deep inside
*posts gore webm on /an/*

That feeling was oh so fleeting
*joins MGTOW*
I could barely contain the high
*tells you that morality is a spook*
When I raped Maggie Marie
*>nothing personell, kid*
My God was I alive
*slices you in half*

>>9580574
BTFO

I raped Maggie Marie, said the man
played a trick to get her in his van
Her vageni got cold
She was stiff as a board
And he posted his poem on 4chan

Edgy yet uninteresting