Rate my opening line

If this isn't a poem trash it.

>>9369331
>to high

>>9369331
incomprehensible/10

Hey guys can you rate my poem

The Rent
Is to high,
Living here between
Reasons to live?

>>9369331
garbage

>>9369437
Why?

>>9369401
You ruined it. It's shit, you're dumb. Also unfunny.

Rate my opening line

riverrun, past Eve and Adams, from swerve of shore to bend of bay, brings us by a commodius vicus of recirculation back to Howth, Castle and Environs.

>>9369446
Never read anything more pretentious in my life.

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>>9369331
Rate my opening line: Are you a computer? Because I want to turn you on.

>>9369331
Rate my opening line:
>In the beginning was the Word, and the Word was with God, and the Word was God.

>>9369452
kek, thanks jung

Ambiguity is something which can be considered in many ways. Some think of it in a certain fashion while others think of it in a completely different fashion. Still others consider it differently.

>>9369331
Here's maybe a clearer arrangement:
>The rent here is too high, living between reasons to live.
I like it btw

>>9369606
All-time best

>>9369713
Thanks nigger

Rate Mine:

The night was cold and dark with a slight breeze lightly blowing the leaves underfoot. On a front porch sat an elderly man, he went by no name to most people.

>>9369864
Loose the first sentence.

Rate mine:

Fi widda murderah hi gon gun com uppa wid fi inna dih nigga ha he an ho he come up like dis he huss.

>>9369331
i feel like one of us is having a stroke. quick, OP, do you smell burning feathers?

It was a dark and stormy night.
I like peanuts

Blaaaaaargh! Bits of sick were drowning in the canal.

>>9369452
Kek tanks Warthon.

>>9369864
Learn to use commas correctly.
And I doubt that the leaves underfoot were blowing unless you have extremely light footsteps.

>>9369331
?????/10