R8 my poem

>>9286010
5/12 on a pleb scale.

Ama teen taken rough by two;
Brush bait and mast, flesh flickering -
Sticky fingers and Oh Yeah.

>>9286053
Could you elaborate?

Really bad

>twas
>broken eyes
>that last line

>>9286099
It reads like the parody of a half-assed poem from the romantic era.

>>9286010
>a ungodly fright
stopped reading here, should have stopped reading immediately

not a poem/10

>>9286284
I mean it kinda is a parody of a work of Geothe.

>>9286010
needs more gore and promiscuity, ill help:

At a party we gathered under the moon, twas a night not filled with dread and gloom.
We walked about greeting each other, and that was when I found my lover. We gadded about all night, soaking in the lovely sights.
>My lover from her blouse removed her teet, and from it I suckled milk so sweet.
The moon and stars shown so bright until my mind was filled with a ungodly fright!
>unbeknownst in front of me stood the killer Rapes McGee.
When this night ends will I see my love again? At the thought of this I began to cry and more than one dreadful tear was shed from my broken eyes.
>As my eyes did weep, this brought a smile to Rapes McGee
>He stabbed and slashed my wife-to-be, and in her throat hole took a pee
>As I ran I felt in a trance, I didnt realize I pooped my pants
>I wished my love had said: "Why do you cry under such a wondrous night sky, is it for I?" and reassured me of our never ending love before Rapes McGee stuck his penis in her lifeless husk

Now its 10/10 anon

>>9286010
>twas
I stopped reading there.

>>9286010
Just like the raw fish in your pic

>>9286393
whoa i thought it was a pizza from the thumbnail.

really makes your think.