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Can you guys critique the beginning of my book I'm working on? 2017-03-13 12:40:28 Post No. 9230038
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Can you guys critique the beginning of my book I'm working on?
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2017-03-13 12:40:28
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"Sits the man, name of Jon; croSSed-legs. Focus he does on paper in hand. Intterupt to reach for pipe - wood! PIPe!, there is not. Look forward he does, set down is paper. PluMP and orange, is at there feline, smoke it does the pipe. "Garfield!!", cries the man he does."
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>>9230038
bretty good m8, but is the book goanna have naughty bits?
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>>9230041
Maybe, but no swearing.
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There's nothing to critique, you clearly don't have a firm grasp of the English language.
I'd say go back to 5th grade and work your way up from there.
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>itt: people taking the bait
>and not making lasagna puns
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Pretty good, I would buy the digital version and upload it for free.
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>>9230038
I wanna see the man fuck the cat and when he cums he screams "lasagna"
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