found this story I wrote as a kid is it /lit/?

>having to warn a prophet
funny to me

>>9216380

Better than Tolkein.

>>9216380
he smashed his what WHAT DID HE SMASH?
also
>b-b-b-but sir

>>9216380
>no qutoations marks
>allusions to mythology
>use of the term nightfall as a clever foreshadowing of the eventual downfall of our hero

Fuck man, I will never be this /lit/

>french prophet

>>9216380
a cute!

>>9216394
>autism stutters
truly he was ahead of his time

also post more OP

>>9216380
Damn, this is the best modern fantasy I've read in seven years, I love how the characters have recognizable traits, that's very innovative

>>9216380
>main characters are named simply by their profession
>prophet has a name

unironically ths is amazing

>>9216415
unfortunately this is all there is, I had the bad habit of giving up before ever finishing everything. I'll see if there's any others I can find

>>9216423
anything*

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>>9216423
>I had the bad habit of giving up before ever finishing everything

>>9216423
and it was just getting good too....

>>9216380
I hope the next scene has the small bard standing in the corner of the bar complaining about his feet hurting.

>>9216380
Better than A Song of Ice and Fire.

>>9216673

At this point, anything is.

>>9216423
>giving up before finishing
truly /lit/ indeed

What do you say lads, should we help OP finish his story?

>>9216380
>removed a sword from a sheath
Nice poetic ambiguity

>>9216380
When I go to Chilis they serve me before I pay.

>>9217058
Yeah, but are the people who work at chili's innkeepers? I think not.

>>9216380
this is cute.
>gilgamet
>can't write properly
>already making allusions to ancient mesopotamian mythology

it's very /lit/. I'm actually jelly.

>>9216380
Partly gives me hope to write something myself, partly crushes the same hope.
10/10 most lit thing i've ever read.

>>9216976
kek

>>9216380
unironically really good for the writing of a young child

>>921638
>as they waited to be served in the in, a large warrior stormed in

You were a fucking wordsmith

>>9218094
He was 15 when he wrote this. I am his father. He's 25 now and his handwriting hasn't changed. He still comes in from time to time and asks me to read him "Girrguhmeth".

>>9216712
Yes

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>>9219103
>my sides

Yeah well I had a space ship the size of a billion billion billion (a billion billions later) universes and it destroyed loads more universes every billionth of a second and it was one half of the shock troop empire.

But seriously that's pretty normal for a kid who's good at doing creative shit.

>>9219122
That is to say it's not a thing you should cringe over or whatever.

>gilgamet
>Strongest warrior in all of history
>Barks orders at people
>Doesn't like paying for stuff
>Attacks innkeepers for testing him
How can I write a character this compelling?

>>9216380
>tfw you and your bro would write Naruto fanfiction and draw DBZ comics with alternative super-powered pseudo homosexual men with tiger tails called Taiyans and make top trumps out of your friends

Nostalgic.

>>9216423
A regular George RR Martin.

>>9216380
just like a light novel