I need Help Editing/Creating my "Experimental" Novel

dude why would you ask this on 4chan of all places

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>>9129074
self-promotion general?

am I gonna make it /lit/?
>not OP
1/2

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>>9129090

>>9129090
>>9129099
When did 'experimental' become synonymous with 'random fucking shit'?
Please end your life

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>>9129090
>footnotes in poetry

>>9129119
is that a no?

>>9129090
>>9129099
you're lucky this is really well executed, otherwise the formatting would be unforgiveable

feels a lot like eliot
I know the formatting is part of the point
but I wonder if your talents would be better used within the constraints of linear poetry

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>>9129090
Is this what literature has become

>>9129090
>>9129099

Let me guess, you just finished reading Danielewski?

>>9129090
Are you working on a book? Are all the poems like that? Related? Any ever plans for a large cohesive work? Do you write in any other styles?

>>9129136
thanks! I have bunches of linear works, but this one elicits a response on here that's always interesting

>>9129188
I haven't read him yet. Is House of Leaves any good?

>>9129189
I am. Most of my poems are linear. I obsess over certain concepts in my writing and large swathes of it are related.
I love to write haiku and I've been writing a lot of rhyme-heavy free verse lately

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>>9129200
Might you at all be interested in helping with my novel? how old are you? pure curiosity

>>9129074
I'm sincerely interested, OP. What's your e-mail? We could make something that changes the way humans think forever.

>>9129225
I of course have no way to know if you are trolling me or not, but of course I hope you are not, and of course I hope you are intelligent, creative, talented, and skilled:

http://pastebin.com/A983Xmgu

>>9129090
There are some beautiful lines in here, just cut out the bullshit. Just write poetry.

>>9129200
You'll never fully emulate my style no matter how much you try to be me.

>>9129221
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i'm horrible at editing
it takes me 7 or 8 proofreadings to be relatively free of typos
unfortunately I am focusing on my own pretensions atm, but i get it and I understand the want of a writing partner.

>>9129243
thanks man

>>9129244
probably not, anon

>>9129090
Interesting how it would look on actual page

>>9129287
on 8/2 x 11 it looks like a fax with a toner issue

the fact i can't find a way to shuffle it around (mainly part 1) to fit on a5 or other sizes is a big issue preventing me from trying to put it in a collection. Maybe I could do like a centerfold like nudie magazines do.

>>9129265
How many different 'modes of sense' does it make to you? Is there are 'right' way to read it? Or several, at least, that you are aware of? Does ""everything"" have "'specific"" meanings, at least to you, at least that you may be generally aware of?

>>9129090
>>9129099
Man I thought I was a fucking faggot with my poetry, thanks for making me feel better about myself.

>>9129314
>How many different 'modes of sense' does it make to you?
I'm happy-ish with it looking at most of its structure and how it reflects the 'narrative'
I'm super happy with most of the wording and how the allusions stack in it
I think it makes sense in some broad ways, but trying give it the very specific narrator I wrote it in mind of would be difficult to say the least (which i think, reflects a failure on my part)

>Is there are 'right' way to read it?
No, but I do keep in mind that left-to-right is a big deal and try to use that to guide a reading

>Does ""everything"" have "'specific"" meanings, at least to you, at least that you may be generally aware of?
yes, but I don't think they are as necessary as the attempted emotional content

>>9129327
that's a hostile thank-you

>>9129225
>>9129237
I sent you an email as "A"
:^)

>>9129355
>, but trying give it the very specific narrator I wrote it in mind of would be difficult to say the least (which i think, reflects a failure on my part)
I dont think thats a failure on your point: I was strictly wondering if the average person may look at this and say :I dont know where to start, I hardly know what any of this means::

I was simply wonder how much more than the average person would you know of your work... and I guess if you had any guess how close that would be to 'how much is possible to be garnered from the writing', which of course is the "art if ambiguous and infinite and subjective" as a billion people can look at the simple mona lisa and think a billion things

So yea, I was simply wondering if 'every word, and every possible linking way you wrote it' 'has some meaning to you', of course in some sense that answer must be yes, as you are aware of every word on the page: though I understand if some or most was written in a 'free-automatic' state.

>>9129368
>I sent you an email as "A"
>:^)
I hope you are a Genius over the age of 22
--___--

>>9129392
no was written in a 'free-automatic' state

i sometimes use that sort of thing to break out of writer's block, but I rarely go back to a piece that does this.

i completely understand why someone would believe that however.

>>9129408
none of it*

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>>9129243
>Just write poetry.
>there is only one way to write poetry

>>9129398
Believe in me, Anon. I have no doubt in our potential.

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>9129423
OPs can or cant bump their own threads, how does that work?

This is some fucking excellent pasta. Will be curating for my collection

>>9129074
Hey OP my email is [email protected] if you want to chat. Please send me a sample of your work so I know what I'm dealing with.

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Going to sleep, maybe this bumps.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lLRL7fsQFT8
(whole thing is absolutely great but, I truly love it all, but really am attracted to 3rd movement at: 10:37 , its cute, funny, clunky, awkward, pretty, beautiful, difficult, playful, love it lately :) )

http://pastebin.com/A983Xmgu

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qonx7vKoroM

>>9129088
>dude why would you ask this on 4chan of all places
Because 1 does not equal 4,000 and you never know who might be lurking

If this lives until im back from working out ill make a new email adress. Am intrigued.

>>9129074
Shot you an e-mail. Godspeed, anon.

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>>9132651
>>9133381
Thanks guys. Im praying, for my sake, you guys are good ;)

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>>9129217
hearty chuckle

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If there was a rooney it would be a bump

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eSWLZVsdZgk

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>>9134645
Whoa! Bravo!!!

>>9133518
>>9134243
>>9134436
>>9134645
Sorry but what's going on? Since when does /lit/ listen to classical guitar? Reveal yourself and be kissed.

>>9129099
Solid. I actually don't like poetry all that much. This is good. Not heavy on imagery, but imagery can slow shit down, so who needs it? "fuck into a nuclear family" doesn't fit, it is too agressive. Then again, who gives a fuck what I think. Write a whole book like this and it could be sequel to FW.

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>>9134809
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iaEcDgxm8es

>>9134823
>fuck into a nuclear family"
He could use 'sex into a nuclear family' if those particular letters are too harsh

>>9134871
Yes. Ana Vidovic and Li Xie (sp) are great. Hadn't heard of the two you showed me. Thank you. Post throwaway so we can be friends.

>>9134954
>http://pastebin.com/A983Xmgu

Im op. Do you happen by any chance to be something of a literary/poetical/political/philosophical genius?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DvCM3jHLwxU

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6PTZOuKx09k

>>9133518
Sorry went to bed, just made one now
[email protected]