What do you guys think? Is that last paragraph just enough or

>>8887944
Overwritten, keep it simple. Just because the subject is space doesn't mean the writing has to be overblown and dramatic, quite the opposite even.

Yeah i kinda thought so too it was actually an essay on facts and scientific stuff so that last paragraph sticks out like a sore thumb

How could i end this though?

Ex. "In conclusion, though the task of colonizing Mars is seemingly impossible due to the myriad of indeterminate variables and strict conditions, we believe it to be of the utmost importance, and will therefore commit to it, determined and hopeful for the future.

>>8887944
Fix the lowercase I, the missing commas, the parallel errors, etc., and then worry about the tone.

>>8887944
Wait hold up guys i should have said that the last sentence is a reference to a jfk speech about space. Should it stay or change?