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Crit thread 2016-12-26 04:27:23 Post No. 8887088
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Crit thread Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:27:23 Post No. 8887088 [Report]

C-critique me, /lit/. A little something I wrote for school. It's the only time I really have dedicated to writing. I'm not sure if I should go on with it.
You're welcome to post anything of your's you wish to be critiqued

Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:30:09 Post No.8887095
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Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:30:09 Post No.8887095 [Report]

>>8887088
How about, "looked like slow ants in a bird's eye"? Dainty frogs croaking doesn't make much sense to me.

Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:36:53 Post No.8887120
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Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:36:53 Post No.8887120 [Report]

>>8887088
>river was winding thing
i dont like it
long chunk of purple prose i dont know where its going

posting mine again and again hoping for any opinions whatsoever
bilinguical version, i am not native english>>8887088

translation
http://pastebin.com/y1PWibix
original
http://pastebin.com/TwsaNxLA

Anonymous 2016-12-26 04:59:12 Post No.8887189
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Soz I forgot to post the second part

Anonymous 2016-12-26 07:36:28 Post No.8887622
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Anonymous 2016-12-26 07:36:28 Post No.8887622 [Report]

>>8887088

>paragraphs lmao

Anonymous 2016-12-26 09:03:40 Post No.8887895
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Anonymous 2016-12-26 09:03:40 Post No.8887895 [Report]

>>8887088
If only there was a big thread that said Critique Thread that was almost always up for you to get critiques in.

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