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Critique my romance/drama story idea? 2016-10-11 07:13:47 Post No. 8606313
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I want you to be brutally honest if this sounds interesting or not? Yes there is some self-insertion but not too much I promise. =)
>average kind of socially awkward kid goes to college
>realizes no way he can pay absurd amount to graduate
>meets a reserved on the outside but brazen in the inside girl with same problem
>they become really good friends but relationship doesn’t grow into something more
>together they hatch a plan to make money
>she becomes a stripper and he becomes a pimp
>neither of them have any experience with this world but are desperate for money and give it a shot
>he deals with being intimidated by other pimps and learning how to hold his own
>she deals with daddy issues and increasing her sense of self worth
>both of them lead complete double lives
>initially they work together but the sex world drives them apart with feelings of jealousy, lust and greed.
>will they overcome these challenges and be able to admit love for one another?
I know it's very rough right now (especially the why they become sex workers part) so feel free to give me plot suggestions. Thanks!
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You sound like a virgin
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>cool guy with spiky hair gets motorcycle
>roughs up some nerds
>all the chicks dig him
>wants new sunglasses
>conflict arises
>sunglasses are purchased and conflict is resolved
>epilogue about pizza and video games
Is this good or is it great?
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there's specific threads for this buddy
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no it doesn't sound interesting in the slightest. i always try to give positive/constructive criticism but this sounds like unbearable shit. the most youll get out of writing this is really bad embarrassment in 5 years time which might be a good learning experience for someone like you. shame is a good teacher.
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>>8606346
OP here. Thanks for being honest, I have to ask though, what specifically did you not like? Do you like romantic dramas?
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men will always love to try to please women and women always love to be pleased.
romance is not original.
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>>8606313
Kinda butch, tits a bit too small for my tastes,the ass could be fuller, manly face and thick shoulders. On a second thought, it might be a guy.
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Switch the role and it would be golden.
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