Disregarding all grammar and spelling errors. Is this guy's story telling ability spot on? How is it not the perfect story? (other than the content) I mean how it's displayed and written everything is self explanatory and really couldn't be much higher standing.
https://www.wattpad.com/159904091-michael-and-the-sex-goblin
He has other stories that are just as X-rated, but have an easy to follow pattern that is easy to read.
Discuss please.
NSFW writing. It's very X-rated.
I dunno man, I'm not author but I think it has some potential. Seems to follow a lot of storytelling guidelines right?
>>8491207
It could use some work, the structure is good, but I don't think I perfectly understand the real lust The Sex Goblin has for Michael. That could be conveyed a bit better, other than that, it's pretty much what I would define as perfection.
I could really feel each thrust, each moan, each little whimper that Michael would let out. The author definitely has a way with words. Looking forward to reading more of his work.
You can't expect a serious discussion about this right? Are you joking? I might delete my wattpad after reading that. Who writes this? It has a good pattern and everything but there's so much homoerotica in it. I even laughed. How do we discuss this in a serious manner its literal pornography of a genre I can not define.
>>8491226
Wow, clearly you can't appreciate all forms of literature. You ass.
>>8491207
I got a virus just reading about that
>>8491296
It has 5200 reads... Kind of impressive desu.
>>8491328
How is there a virus? I'm reading it right now.
>>8491309
Sex sells, boyo
>>8491226
I really enjoyed this story to be honest. I don't know if maybe you should give it a second read through to see if you missed anything man!
>>8491464
nope
>>8491499
no just 3 of those were mine and i was replying to people.
>>8493027
dude just let your thread die and be free of its misery instead of prolonging its sad life by bumping it like that
>>8491207
It's trash. There are definitely X rated gems out there, but the subejct matter is rarely vanilla.