Thoughts on these lines in my novel? (the first sentence) "Only

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Anonymous 2016-09-08 22:38:13 Post No. [Report]

Thoughts on these lines in my novel?

(the first sentence)
"Only one enemy remained; two if you counted God."

(particularly proud of this one)
"In the war for day and night; Right is wrong and wrong is right; On the edge of darkness and light; The eighth of seven joins the fight"

(two of my favorites)
"Order occurs when an object is in the right place at the right time"

"The wonderful thing about humanity: we always want more"

Anonymous 2016-09-08 22:47:59 Post No.8487947
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 22:47:59 Post No.8487947 [Report]

>>8487917
>"Only one enemy remained; two if you counted God."

Dont force this meme yet

Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:21:57 Post No.8488038
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:21:57 Post No.8488038 [Report]

>>8487917
Not trying to be mean but it's kinda sorta pretty edgy sounding

Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:34:55 Post No.8488062
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:34:55 Post No.8488062 [Report]

Has potential to be a sweet, new meme.

Will save for future use.

Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:40:20 Post No.8488077
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:40:20 Post No.8488077 [Report]

>>8487947
Too late

Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:46:37 Post No.8488087
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:46:37 Post No.8488087 [Report]

>>8487917
Ha-ha, anon! Is there any cheese in those lines from your novel?
Because they sure sound...
CHEESY! :D

Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:58:58 Post No.8488113
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Anonymous 2016-09-08 23:58:58 Post No.8488113 [Report]

>>8487917

I absolutely LOVE the first line of your novel anonfag69, it's the perfect example of rhyme flow rhyme. Now I'm known to be a harsh critic of other people's work but this is totally unique and amazing: you have real talent.

Anonymous 2016-09-09 00:37:05 Post No.8488216
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Anonymous 2016-09-09 00:37:05 Post No.8488216 [Report]

>>8487917
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