Rate this, e/lit/ists.

It was a bit too personal to get into right or wrong.

Seems like a smart and thoughtful kid. I hope he's going places.

>>8395191
Intelligent and well-written analysis, kid did his research too. He knew how to work the system with the underprivileged sob story. As the first reply mentioned, we really can't say if it is right or wrong.

>>8395191
I am 18, Vietnamese. This essay, to me, is a slap in the face. Feel so dumb.

I'm going to base my claim off of three things: The ads that seem to pop up on the sides of that (stop incarceration, #BLM, something with a gay couple), the fact that the project came from College Board, and the fact that the only reason the kid won was because of his "Other nations/other eyes" point of view; this is SJW Bullshit. Not what you're presenting to us, it's true and real, but just the competition the kid won and the amazingness of the essay and all that.

>>8395354
there're 44 countries in competition, faget

>>8395191
The introduction is a little clunky. And really it is a little, it's a very solid piece of writing really. The worst part for me were the groups of three here:

>Yet closer study revealed that the painting represents an ideal of learning as universal as it is inspiring: relentless, unhindered critical inquiry that crosses physical, cultural, and disciplinary boundaries.
It would work better without the inspiring because at least then you have a clear link between universal and the list of adjectives, the idea of inspiration is not really developed. But I think it's fundamental misuse of rhetoric there regardless, it's fluff. "as universal as it is inspiring" is p meaningless too.

Seen way worse writing from people with may more experience and education, the points above are minor.

>>8395191
The Atlantic is pleb central. I'm not giving them any clicks.