After a whole bunch of scrolling, I decided there weren't any prose critique threads.
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Haha. Shoot me.
Someone just made one.
Mine has a better picture though.
Look at how beautiful she is.
>>8351952
It seems kind of like a gimmick but the gimmick is pulled off. It's not beautiful by any means. It's just... "Oh, I get it," kind of thing.
Have you tried plot?
There isn't any here.
"Guy doing stuff" isn't plot.