Help with a story I'm writing

>>8309090

Have you tried hanging yourself?

>>8309096
Yeah it didn't work

>>8309090
Why would she get the throne if he has an OP, army-destroying bodyguard?

>>8309112
Originally, she WAS the Queen until the protaganist was able to pull support from the commoners and some of the royal army to overthrow her and kill her, but through her magic she was able to be resurrected. A lot of events happened inbetween her death and her resurrection, it was a 2 year gap, and now I don't want the story to have the bodyguard to just rip her apart, i want to make it interesting and have him lose his powers, because to me, if he just kills her, the story is just taking the easy way out and not making much conflict

>>8309090
Girl seduces superman thing and it turns on the King.

>>8309138
Then why not have her return to him and play on his guilt and his former love for her before betraying him, or even convincing him he's not fit to rule.

>>8309153
That way he's not losing his power, just his allegiance.

>>8309156
Convincing him he's not fit to rule would be useless, as he's very hardheaded and closeminded, it's his way or the highway. Telling him hes not fit to rule would just anger him even more. And him loving her is a looong stretch. There was a mutual respect between each other but to go as far as saying they loved each other is too much imo

>>8309156
That way the strength of your Goku character can't even be used.

>>8309161
It's kind of like a life debt, like how in Star Wars with Han Solo and Chewbacca. Him losing allegiance to the King wouldn't happen

>>8309090

What if the king has power over the superman? The superman's powers all stem from the king in some way. Maybe it's not the king himself, but more his position of holding the throne. Regardless, the king is responsible for the superman's powers.

Then say the superman does something that really betrays the king. It can be something petty, or something bad, but the king, in reaction, takes away the superman's powers. Something like, "I can't trust you to act in my name, so I am disavowing you of your powers" or some shit.

So that way, the king himself is to blame when his strongest warrior is not there to protect him from whatever the true badness is.

>>8309179
That's a really good idea! I could definitely see the King going that route in my story

>>8309171
Oh but that does happen. And that would make the betrayal that much more heartbreaking.

>>8309263
Maybe I can have one of the King's closest friends to betray him, but not necessarily the superman

>>8309090
This sounds absolutely terrible. Was going to offer suggestions but this is just so bad. Honestly OP, what were you thinking?

>>8309090
His power is directly related to his virginity. What about casual sex in some austere yet comfortable road motel?
Trust me, I'm a writer.

>>8309442
I write for my own leisure, even if I write like total shit lmao it makes me happy

>>8309187
Cool. I'm glad you like it.

do a play on the arrogance of the strong where your protagonists really fuck up and send your superman into what they believe to be an enemy camp in a ruin, but deep in the basement rocks fall and everyone dies

>>8309090
There's just this mystical being in your world?

>>8309090
King's mystic guard falls in love with usurper or usurper's mystic guard.

>>8309476
The King's Wizard.

>>8309090
Make it so that the mystical being lose its powers if its raped. Then have the mystical being get raped.

>>8310144
Everyone in this world has magic, but not many can channel it

>>8309090

Well, if it were a movie made in Hollywood, the usurper would have a magical gadget that robs the superman's powers and then the protagonist has to get the device back to release the powers and beat the villain. I mean, if you really want to be as generic as possible.

>>8311119
Nah, thats too generic

>>8309090
How's it going AlphaChip

>>8312699
I don't know who that is