First 3K Words.

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>>8245724
It's an okay idea if you set a target audience of around 6-13 and make the prose very simple and easy to read.

>>8245738
Perhaps I'm ignorant when it comes to publishing a novel, but I don't plan on trying to appeal to a set audience. If you can comprehend the book, you're old enough to enjoy it, no?

>>8245724
don't focus on world building and lore in "the first sections." have it evolve alongside characters and the discovery of the plot or nobody will ever read this.

>>8245774
When I said that in my first post, I guess I really meant that I wouldn't be introducing the protagonists for a few chapters. But you're right of course. Thank you.

>>8245771
Fantasy not build on a traditional occultist school of thought is generally suited to a younger audience, it's soft-fantasy.

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>Fantasy not build on a traditional occultist school of thought is generally suited to a younger audience, it's soft-fantasy.

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>>8245793
To be honest I didn't understand that either.

>>8245799
I suppose this is what I get for asking 4chan for legitimate advice.

>>8245724
Tense is all over the place, using past and present in same sentence. Should be using present tense more than anything, want to feel like its happening now. To read everything with from the past is boring and lacks engagement.

Adverbs should be as rare as talented women writers.

Over description is also rampant and needs to be reduced