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Rate this poem, /lit/ 2016-06-13 01:35:52 Post No. 8156493
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No.
he said.
“No,” he said.
“no,” I said.
“I know,” she said.
“Thank you,” she said.
“Come with me,” she said.
“Talk to me,” she said.
“Don’t worry about it,” she said.
It made me want to cry.
no one had seen him since.
it made me feel uneasy.
no one had seen him.
the thought made me smile.
the pain was unbearable.
the crowd was silent.
the man called out.
the old man said.
the man asked.
He was silent for a long moment.
he was silent for a moment.
it was quiet for a moment.
it was dark and cold.
there was a pause.
it was my turn.
There is no one else in the world.
there is no one else in sight.
they were the only ones who mattered.
they were the only ones left.
he had to be with me.
she had to be with him.
I had to do this.
I wanted to kill him.
I started to cry.
I turned to him.
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>>8156493
When I was reading the first part of it I thought this thread was going to be about making fun of writers with shitty dialogue and prose.
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i give it a 0/1
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>>8156622
Damn, only one from perfection.
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This is a poem generated by Google AI after reading romance works
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Absolutely dreadful.
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>>8156664
That's dissapointing, i read like two of the shorter ones and was kind of impressed.
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horses were his favorite animals
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Rate this poem:
Now run tell your mommy
Fuck the money, I"m in it for the young girls punani
Sniff, sniff, cooshi-tush, push mushy bush
Yeah dog! (I'm not a dog I'm a wolf.)
I rap like I'm standing next to you in the lift without speaking
When you're thinking about what you're doing this weekend
You in the shallow end with arm bands
I'm in the deep end, underwater your legs look good
You're like "what the?"
I'm on some 1992 brand new with a 80s twist
Lightning bolts, loop machines, brainwash amazingness
Pop terrorists, destroy all competitors
Dark nemesis, manipulate media
I'm real like the landlord
The lord of the land
You suck, stuck as fuck
Everyone is bored of you man
You know when you go to sleep funny and you can't feel your leg?
Well you're still asleep, dummy, plus your whole heads gone dead
I'll punch you in the face, you still won't feel it
Like POW! did you feel that? Exactly!
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>>8156677
As per the maternal tradition of his family.
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>>8156664
I still think it sounds like late Beckett.
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>>8156695
I had this exact thought, but a very, very bad imitation.
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>>8156493
Rate my poem, /lit/.
Getting paid,
getting gay'd.
Getting paid, getting
gay'd.
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>>8156712
Check out gay for pay.
Never again will you have to separate the two. You can finally, truly, enjoy your work.
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>>8156493
Too many pronoun ambiguities and repetitive lines. I understand that's probably the motif but it isn't exactly working.
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>>8156717
I once went gay for free.
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>>8156493
It has no rhythm, rhyme, imagery, metaphors, or music to the words, so I can't really consider it a poem at all.
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>>8156728
I once free'd a gay, trapped in my father's closet.
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>rate this poem /lit/
"No" he said.
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